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Kevin_Smarts 1 год назад
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locations/gschool_coolkid_chats.qsrc

@@ -41,7 +41,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 		else
 			if (dimaRevenge = 6 and (dimaRevChoice = 3 or dimaRevChoice = 5 or dimaRevChoice = 6)) or (dimaRevenge = 7 and dimaRevChoice = 2) or (dimaRevenge = 8 and (dimaRevChoice = 1 or dimaRevChoice = 4)):
 				'Dimka glares at as you approach. "What the fuck do you want, slut?"'
-				'You sigh. "Look, I know a lot has happened between us, but I thought we could leave it in the past and just be friends or something."'
+				'You sigh. "Look, I know a lot has happened between us, but I thought we could leave it in the past and just be friends or something?"'
 				'He stares at you blankly before shrugging. "Whatever." The two of you make small talk, but you get the feeling he''s planning something.'
 			else
 				if fame['pav_slut'] > 200:
@@ -60,11 +60,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 							'"You seem to have the wrong idea about me <<$pcs_nickname>>." Dimka holds out his hand to keep you from getting any closer. "Just because we run in the same social circle doesn''t mean we''re friends."'
 							'You can''t help but scoff and roll your eyes. "Who said I want to be friends? You just looked lonely standing over here by yourself. I was just trying to be nice." You trade a few more barbs back and forth.'
 						else
-							'Dimka is willing to entertain you for a bit, occasionally taking part in the conversation but letting you do most of the talking. "Hey, Bella!" he calls as he spots her walking by. "Sorry, I hope you don''t mind." He follows after her before you can even reply. At least he let you talk to him.'
+							'Dimka is willing to entertain you for a few minutes, occasionally taking part in the conversation but letting you do most of the talking. "Hey, Bella!" he calls as he spots her walking by. "Sorry, I hope you don''t mind." He follows after her before you can even reply. At least he let you talk to him.'
 						end
 					elseif grupTipe = 2:
 						if npc_rel['A1'] >= 50:
-							'"Have I shown you my photos from my last trip?" he smiles. "Take a look at this." He pulls out his phone and shows you some photos from his latest trip to Moscow. "You would''ve loved it out there. It really made me realize we''re wasting away out here in a place like this." You then chat about the other places he has visited.'
+							'"Have I shown you my photos from my last trip?" he smiles. "Take a look at this." He pulls out his phone and shows you some photos from his latest trip to Moscow. "You would''ve loved it out there. It really made me realize we''re wasting away out here in a place like this." You then chat about the other places he''s visited.'
 							if dimarudorient = 1:act 'Ask for some pale lady': gt 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'dim_drugs'
 						elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
 							'Dimka looks down at you with a condescending smile. "What do you want?" he asks, maintaining his "friendly" appearance in front of everyone.'
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 						end
 					elseif grupTipe = 3:
 						if npc_rel['A1'] >= 60:
-							'Dimka greets you with a friendly smile, making room for you in the group made up of Bella, Igor and a few other students. Some of them give you an odd look, obviously not sure why you''re here, but Dimka makes you feel welcome. "Relax, she doesn''t have the plague," he playfully chides everyone and you are soon engaged in a conversation with Dimka.'
+							'Dimka greets you with a friendly smile, making room for you in the group made up of Bella, Igor and a few other students. Some of them give you an odd look, obviously not sure why you''re here, but Dimka makes you feel welcome. "Relax, she doesn''t have the plague," he playfully chides everyone and you''re soon engaged in a conversation with Dimka.'
 							if dimarudorient = 1:act 'Ask for some pale lady': gt 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'dim_drugs'
 						elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
 							'Dimka looks down at you with a condescending smile. "You get lost loser? Shouldn''t you be off pretending to be an elf or something?" he asks with a charming smile on his face.'
@@ -88,7 +88,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 						end
 					elseif grupTipe = 4:
 						if npc_rel['A1'] >= 60:
-							'Dimka greets you with a friendly smile, making room for you in the group made up of Bella, Igor and a few other students. Some of them give you an odd look, obviously not sure why you''re here, but Dimka makes you feel welcome. "Relax, she doesn''t have the plague," he playfully chides everyone and you are soon engaged in a conversation with Dimka.'
+							'Dimka greets you with a friendly smile, making room for you in the group made up of Bella, Igor and a few other students. Some of them give you an odd look, obviously not sure why you''re here, but Dimka makes you feel welcome. "Relax, she doesn''t have the plague," he playfully chides everyone and you''re soon engaged in a conversation with Dimka.'
 							if dimarudorient = 1:act 'Ask for some pale lady': gt 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'dim_drugs'
 						elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
 							'Dimka looks down at you with a condescending smile. "What do you want? We don''t have any drugs and none of us want whatever it is you''re selling," he remarks, maintaining his "friendly" appearance in front of everyone.'
@@ -154,7 +154,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka_pay':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'drugs', 'cocaine'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/drugs/lineschool.jpg"></center>'
-		'You walk down the hall, looking into classrooms until you spot one that is empty. You glance around and when no one is looking, you duck inside and rush over to the teacher''s desk. You pour out a few lines and quickly snort them up. You feel the sensation of relief and pleasure rush through your body and spend the next few seconds in a stupor before the bell for the next class rings.'
+		'You walk down the hall, looking into classrooms until you spot one that''s empty. You glance around and when no one is looking, you duck inside and rush over to the teacher''s desk. You pour out a few lines and quickly snort them up. You feel the sensation of relief and pleasure rush through your body and spend the next few seconds in a stupor before the bell for the next class rings.'
 		act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	end
 end
@@ -588,7 +588,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A14'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A14'']>></font></b></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big14.jpg"></center>'
-				'You approach Katja and thank her for taking you home from the disco when you were drunk and she gives you a knowing smile. "Don''t mention it <<$pcs_nickname>>! You really shouldn''t get that drunk again though. It could end badly. Some of the guys there are real pigs..." she says. "Do you want to hang out after school? We could do our homework together?"'
+				'You approach Katja and thank her for taking you home from the disco when you were drunk and she gives you a knowing smile. "Don''t mention it, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You really shouldn''t get that drunk again though. It could end badly. Some of the guys there are real pigs..." she says. "Do you want to hang out after school? We could do our homework together?"'
 				'"Sure, why not?" you reply.'
 				act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			end
@@ -704,26 +704,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja':
 		end
 		act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-			act'Ask for a tampon':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a tampon':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'katja_tampon'
 			end
 			
 			if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-				act'Ask for a pad':
-					$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				act 'Ask for a pad':
+					$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 					gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'katja_tampon'
 				end
 			end
 		elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-			act'Ask for a tampon':
+			act 'Ask for a tampon':
 				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'katja_tampon'
 			end
 			
 			if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-				act'Ask for a pad':
-					$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				act 'Ask for a pad':
+					$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 					gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'katja_tampon'
 				end
 			end
@@ -735,27 +735,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big14.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Katja," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if katjaQW['pantiesQWstage'] = 5:
-			'"Oh!" Katja squeaks, her eyes going wide. "Yes of course!"'
-			'She quickly digs into her purse and comes up with a tampon for you'
-			'"Thanks Katja."'
+			'"Oh!" Katja squeaks, her eyes going wide. "Yes, of course!"'
+			'She quickly digs into her purse and comes up with a tampon for you.'
+			'"Thanks, Katja."'
 			'"You''re welcome," she smiles back.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 			isprok = 1
 			act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		else
 			if npc_rel['A14'] > 20:
-				'"Oh!" Katja squeaks, her eyes going wide and starts digging through her purse. "Yes of course! Uhm... I only have pads, is that okay?"'
+				'"Oh!" Katja squeaks, her eyes going wide and starts digging through her purse. "Yes, of course! Uhm... I only have pads, is that okay?"'
 				if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-					'"That''s fine, it''s an emergency after all. Thanks Katja."'
+					'"That''s fine, it''s an emergency after all. Thanks, Katja."'
 					'"You''re welcome," she smiles as she hands you the pad.'
 					'You thank her again and run off to the bathroom to go put it on.'
 				end
 			else
 				'"Oh!" Katja squeaks, her eyes going wide. A faint blush colors her cheeks as she seems both surprised you''re talking to her and embarrassed about what you''re asking but starts digging through her purse anyways. "I, uhm... I only have pads, is that okay?"'
 				if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-					'"That''s fine, it''s an emergency after all. Thanks Katja."'
+					'"That''s fine, it''s an emergency after all. Thanks, Katja."'
 					'"You''re welcome," she mumbles, looking away as she hands you the pad.'
 					'You thank her again and run off to the bathroom to go put it on.'
 				end
@@ -764,7 +764,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja_tampon':
 				isprokp = 1
 				act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			else
-				act'Uh...':
+				act 'Uh...':
 					cla & *nl
 					'"Uh..."'
 					*nl
@@ -777,7 +777,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja_tampon':
 					act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 				end
 				
-				act'That''s not going to work':
+				act 'That''s not going to work':
 					katjaQW['no_panties_day'] = daystart
 					cla & *nl
 					'"Uhm... A pad''s not going to work for me," you say.'
@@ -785,7 +785,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja_tampon':
 					'"Yeah..." you reply with a wry smirk.'
 					'"Uh... Uhm..." Her cheeks go bright red as she looks around nervously.'
 					'"Maybe you can ask my sister. I know she uses tampons... I have to go!"'
-					'With that she runs off to her next class and unfortunately you need to go too so there is no time to find Vicky.'
+					'She runs off to her next class and unfortunately you need to go too, so there''s no time to find Vicky.'
 					act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 				end
 			end
@@ -794,17 +794,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja_tampon':
 		if katjaQW['pantiesQWstage'] = 5:
 			'"A pad?" Katja raises an eyebrow before fishing through her purse. "What''s wrong with you? Did you start wearing panties again? You know I don''t."'
 			'She hands a tampon over to you with a wry smirk.'
-			'"Right. I forgot about that," you smile back. "Thanks Katja."'
+			'"Right. I forgot about that," you smile back. "Thanks, Katja."'
 			'"You''re welcome," she winks.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 			isprok = 1
 			act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		else
 			'"Oh!" Katja squeaks, her eyes going wide. "Yes of course!"'
 			'She quickly digs into her purse and comes up with a pad for you'
-			'"Thanks Katja."'
+			'"Thanks, Katja."'
 			'"You''re welcome," she smiles back.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the pad on before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the pad on before class starts.'
 			isprokp = 1
 			act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		end
@@ -916,7 +916,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bella':
 			'"Umm... No... It''s a Star Wars game, silly!" you explain enthusiastically.'
 			'"Babe, two things: You don''t call me silly. And no, that would be social suicide." she scoffs.'
 			'You try to talk to her a bit more, but she mostly ignores you. When the bell rings and you both go your own ways, she taps your shoulder. "The Phantom Menace is the best."'
-			'"Wait, how do you... Did you just play me?" You only get a sly wink as an answer.'
+			'"Wait, how do you...?" You only get a sly wink as an answer.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
 		if npc_rel['A22'] >= 70:
@@ -948,26 +948,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bella':
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'bella_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'bella_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'bella_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'bella_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -978,7 +978,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bella_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big22.jpg"></center>'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Bella," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A22'] >= 70:
 			'Bella gives you one look and immediately digs through her purse, coming out with a tampon.'
 			'"Here," she says handing it over. "Hurry! Before class starts!"'
@@ -1055,7 +1055,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cherleading_notice':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/bella/notice/bella_stasya1.jpg"></center>'
 			'"Hey, we were just by Albina''s table and..."'
 			'Bella trails off when she notices Natasha walking towards the table and flutters her eyelashes as she turns towards her. "Oh my god, I love your shirt! Where did you get it?"'
-			'Natasha isn''t sure how to react. "I-It was my mom''s... From the ''90s." she awkwardly mumbles.'
+			'Natasha isn''t sure how to react. "I-It was my mom''s... From the 90s..." she awkwardly mumbles.'
 			'Bella smiles sweetly. "Vintage, how adorable."'
 			act 'Nod in agreement':
 				gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A22', 'like'
@@ -1178,26 +1178,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lizaveta':
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'lizaveta_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'lizaveta_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'lizaveta_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'lizaveta_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1208,7 +1208,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lizaveta_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big140.jpg"></center>'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lizaveta," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A140'] >= 60:
 			'"Sure, sure," Lizaveta says, eyes sparkling as she starts going through her purse and pulls one out. "Here you go!"'
 			'"Thanks Lizaveta."'
@@ -1580,26 +1580,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vicky':
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'vicky_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'vicky_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'vicky_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'vicky_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1610,29 +1610,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vicky_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big15.jpg"></center>'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Vicky," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A15'] >= 70:
 			'"Of course you can," Vicky says without hesitation. It takes her barely any time at all to produce one from her purse. "Here you go!"'
 			'"Thanks Vicky, you''re a lifesaver."'
 			'"What are friends for?" she smiles warmly.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		else
 			'"Of course you can," Vicky says without hesitation. It takes her barely any time at all to produce one from her purse. "Here."'
 			'"Thanks Vicky, you''re a lifesaver."'
 			'"Just be sure to return the favor if I forget," she winks back.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A15'] >= 70:
 			'"You still use pads? You''re just like my sister," Vicky giggles, taking barely any time at all to produce a tampon from her purse. "I don''t have any pads, but here''s a tampon."'
 			'"Thanks Vicky, you''re a lifesaver."'
 			'"What are friends for?" she smiles warmly.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		else
 			'"You still use pads? You''re just like my sister," Vicky giggles, taking barely any time at all to produce a tampon from her purse. "I don''t have any pads, but here''s a tampon."'
 			'"Thanks Vicky, you''re a lifesaver."'
 			'"Pack an emergency tampon with my name on it in your purse and we''ll call it even," she winks back.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		end
 	end
 	isprok = 1
@@ -1682,7 +1682,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stasya':
 			'You smile at her. "I just wanted to talk."'
 			'She rolls her eyes and starts talking to Bella and Irina. They mostly ignore you, but do respond to a few of your questions and comments as they talk about boys and fashion.'
 		else
-			'She stares at you approaching. "What do you want? Never mind I don''t want to know." She turns and ignores you, talking with Bella and Irina instead, who also ignore you. At least they don''t chase you off.'
+			'She stares at you approaching. "What do you want? Never mind, I don''t want to know." She turns and ignores you, talking with Bella and Irina instead, who also ignore you. At least they don''t chase you off.'
 		end
 	else
 		gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A139', 'dislike'
@@ -1691,13 +1691,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stasya':
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
 		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'stasya_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'stasya_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1709,7 +1709,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stasya':
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'stasya_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1720,7 +1720,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stasya_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big139.jpg"></center>'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Stasya," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A139'] >= 70:
 			'"Yeah, of course!" she says hurriedly, immediately digging into her purse to produce one.'
 			'"Thanks Stasya, you''re a lifesaver."'
@@ -1765,12 +1765,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'irina':
 		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 90:
 			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, what did the virgin say after her first blowjob?" Irina asks, taking a sip of water as you respond.'
 			'"I don''t know, what did she say?"'
-			'"<i>Ah lurb yuuhh~!</i>" she replies without swallowing, grinning at you as it spills all down her chin and throat.' 
+			'"<i>Ah lurb yuuhh~!</i>" she replies without swallowing, grinning at you as it spills down her chin.' 
 		elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
-			'"I would rather have Petia stare at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, slut!" Irina hisses with disgust. "Keep your legs together, cunt! This isn''t a whorehouse, it''s a fucking school! You''re a fucking embarrassment, you know that?" Irina taunts you before she spits in front of your legs. "Use this as lube to go and fuck yourself!"'
+			'"I would rather have Petia stare at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, slut!" she hisses with disgust. "Keep your legs together, cunt! This isn''t a whorehouse, it''s a fucking school! You''re a fucking embarrassment, you know that?" Irina taunts you before she spits in front of your legs. "Use this as lube to go and fuck yourself!"'
 			'You let her finish her rant before putting your hand under your skirt and letting your fingers slide over your clit. "When there''s an itch, you''ve got to scratch it!" Irina stands silently, shocked at your actions.'
 		else
-			'"I would rather have Petia stare at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, slut!" Irina hisses with disgust.'
+			'"I would rather have Petia stare at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, slut!" she hisses with disgust.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 1:
 		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 60:
@@ -1815,10 +1815,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'irina':
 			'"I''m more into Luke myself..." you reply while keeping your cool.'
 			'"Who? You mean the old man who trained Rey?" she asks in surprise while mimicking a cock getting soft with her finger.'
 			'"He was young and cute in the originals! You know, A New Hope, Empire Strikes Back?" you explain.'
-			'"I don''t watch old movies. They''re... old." she shrugs.'  
+			'"I don''t watch old movies. They''re... old," she shrugs.'  
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
-		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 70:
+		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 80:
 			'"You know that, I think it was in 9th grade, we girls had Lavrenti over because we wanted to borrow his camera for new shots for our social media and when he arrived, Bella suggested we kill the lights and see which one of us would dare get naked in front of him as a thank you. Of course, we were joking, so when the light were switched back on none of us were naked, but he had the biggest boner I''d ever seen!" she giggles.'
 			'"Wow, you girls really surprise me sometimes..." you reply with a hint of disappointment, hoping for something more juicy.' 
 			'"I know, right?!" She giggles while mimicking the size of Lavrenti''s cock with her hands like a fisherman describing his catch.' 
@@ -1829,7 +1829,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'irina':
 			'"Fuck you bitch, you''re getting it now!" You storm towards her before Lavrenti and Lena grab hold of you. "We''re in school, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You can kick her smug ass later, so calm down before the teachers hear you!"'  
 		else
 			'"Psst, you know where to get some, you know... green?" Irina whispers at you.'
-			'"What, you think just because I''m a gopnik I know every fucking drug dealer in town? Is that what you''re saying?" you angrily reply.'
+			'"What, you think just because I''m a gopnik I know every fucking drug dealer in town? Is that what you''re saying?!" you angrily reply.'
 			'"God no, of course not!" she says trying to explain herself.' 
 			'"There''s a guy in front of the Five-Eight in the evening. Your pretty face and those nice lips might get you a discount, if you know what I mean..." you laugh.'
 			'"Eeeww, gross! What''s wrong with you?! Thanks anyway, <<$pcs_nickname>>." As you''re parting ways, you give her an air gesture of a blowjob while holding an imaginary bag of weed in the other hand.'
@@ -1839,7 +1839,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'irina':
 			'It''s easy to please Irina since she likes to talk about herself. So long as you ask her about herself and don''t interrupt her, she''s more than happy to talk with you.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
 			'"Hey Irina, about the next class.." you try to inquire.'	
-			'If you ever try talking to me again, I''ll make sure the second hand blow up doll Lesco and Petia use in their threesome is more popular than you! God, I can''t have even five minutes to myself without some loser trying to talk to me!" she mumbles in an angry tone as she walks away.'
+			'"If you ever try talking to me again, I''ll make sure the second hand blow up doll Lesco and Petia use in their threesome is more popular than you! God, I can''t have even five minutes to myself without some loser trying to talk to me!" she mumbles in an angry tone as she walks away.'
 		else	
 			'"You don’t have any friends, do you?" Irina asks with a stern, unimpressed look. "And you won''t ever find any either." She then turns around and ignores you.'
 		end
@@ -1847,13 +1847,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'irina':
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
 		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'irina_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'irina_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1865,7 +1865,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'irina':
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'irina_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1876,20 +1876,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'irina_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big17.jpg"></center>'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Irina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 70:
 			'"Yeah sure," she nods and digs into her purse to produce one.'
 			'"Thanks Irina, you''re a lifesaver."'
-			'"Don''t worry about it," she smiles you run to the bathroom to put the tampon in.'
+			'"Don''t worry about it," she smiles before you run to the bathroom to put the tampon in.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A17'] > 20:
 			'"If you really need one," she nods and digs into her purse to produce a tampon.'
 			'"Thanks Irina, you''re a lifesaver."'
-			'"Don''t worry about it," she shrugs you run to the bathroom to put the tampon in.'
+			'"Don''t worry about it," she shrugs before you run to the bathroom to put the tampon in.'
 		else
 			'She stares at you for a few moments before sighing deeply.'
 			'"If you really need one," she says a little begrudgingly and digs into her purse to produce a tampon.'
 			'"Thanks Irina, you''re a lifesaver."'
-			'"You. Owe. Me." She pokes you in the chest before turning away to Bella and you run to the bathroom to put the tampon in.'
+			'"You. Owe. Me." She pokes you in the chest before turning away to Bella as you run to the bathroom to put the tampon in.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 70:
@@ -1920,7 +1920,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia':
 	if fame['pav_slut'] > 200:
 		if npc_rel['A25'] >= 50:
 			'"Hey Sonia!" you greet her with a smile and she gives you a friendly smile in return.'
-			'"Hey..." Her smile fades as she notices the looks everyone else is giving you. You try talking to her and at times she is very animated, only to catch herself and be a lot more reserved. You can tell she is worried about being seen talking to you, but at least she''s nice about it.'
+			'"Hey..." Her smile fades as she notices the looks everyone else is giving you. You try talking to her and at times she is very animated, only to catch herself and be a lot more reserved. You can tell she''s worried about being seen talking to you, but at least she''s nice about it.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A25'] <= 20:
 			'"Hey Sonia!" you greet her with a smile.'
 			'She looks around thinking you''re talking to someone else before realizing you mean her. "Why would you even talk to me? We''re not friends and I don''t want anyone to see me talking to you. Please just go away!" She then moves away to talk to Katja.'
@@ -1985,7 +1985,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia':
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
 		if npc_rel['A25'] >= 50:
 			'"Hey Sonia!" you greet her with a smile and she gives you a friendly little wave.'
-			'"What''s up? Mind if I ask you some questions?" she asks and you shrug. She launches into a barrage of questions about partying with your fellow gopniks. What they''re like, what it''s like to run wild, etc. She seems very interested in what you and the other gopniks do for fun and you talk for a while, mostly sharing some of your favorite stories.'
+			'"What''s up? Mind if I ask you some questions?" she asks and you shrug, causing her to launch into a barrage of questions about partying with your fellow gopniks. She seems very interested in what you and the other gopniks do for fun and you end up talking for a while, mostly sharing some of your favorite stories.'
 !!want to add this so it triggers once the first time Sonias rel hits 50
 			if soniaQW['homeinvite'] = 0:
 				soniaQW['homeinvite'] = 1
@@ -2012,26 +2012,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia':
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'sonia_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'sonia_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'sonia_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'sonia_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -2042,7 +2042,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big25.jpg"></center>'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A25'] >= 70:
 			'"Don''t worry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''ve got your back," she says, immediately digging into her purse to produce one.'
 			'"Thanks Sonia, you''re a lifesaver."'

+ 30 - 30
locations/gschool_gopnik_chats.qsrc

@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vitek':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big9.jpg"></center>'
 	if kotovLoveQW > 0 and fame['pav_slut'] > 200:
-		'Vitek scowls. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what''s this garbage I hear about what you and <<$gnikname>> did? The whole town already knows and the guys have been telling me all about it. You fucking slut!"'
+		'Vitek scowls. "What''s this garbage I hear about what you and <<$gnikname>> did? The whole town already knows and the guys have been telling me all about it. You fucking slut!"'
 		act 'Accuse him of sleeping around':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'npc_relationship', 'set', 'A9', 0
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vitek':
 		end
 	elseif fame['pav_slut'] > 250:
 		if npc_rel['A9'] >= 70:
-			'"Yo, Vitek, what did the virgin say after her first blowjob?"'
+			'"Hey Vitek, what did the virgin say after her first blowjob?"'
 			'"I don''t know, what did she say?" Vitek shrugs while you use the opportunity to take a mouthful of water.'
 			'"I love you..." you reply, pretending that the water dripping out of your mouth is cum while you talk. This gets laughs from a few others, and you manage to get him to talk about a variety of things the group is up to. He only insults you every so often, but in an almost friendly way.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A9'] <= 20:
@@ -311,7 +311,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dan':
 	elseif npc_rel['A10'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 300:
 		if grupTipe = 4:
 			'"Hey Dan!" you greet him.'
-			'"What''s up <<$pcs_nickname>>?" he replies and the two of you engage in a friendly conversation.'
+			'"What''s up, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" he replies and the two of you engage in a friendly conversation.'
 		else
 			'"Hey Dan!" you greet him. As usual, Dan is his arrogant self and barely pays any attention to you.'
 			'"Oh, come on Dan! Don''t act that way. I know you like it when I talk to you."'
@@ -349,12 +349,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'valentin':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big158.jpg"></center>'
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if grupTipe = 4 and gopnik_slut = 1:
-		'He smiles as you approach. "What''s up <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+		'He smiles as you approach. "What''s up, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 		'You smile back. "Nothing much, just wanted to hang out and talk."'
 		'The two of you talk about a few things. He gets a little hands on with you at times, but you''re used to it. As you''re about to leave, he stops you. "Stop by the garage some time. I can always use a break and a quick fuck."'
 	elseif fame['pav_slut'] > 300:
 		if npc_rel['A158'] >= 60:
-			'He smiles as you approach. "What''s up <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+			'He smiles as you approach. "What''s up, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 			'You smile back. "Nothing much, just wanted to hang out and talk."'
 			'The two of you talk about a few things. He gets a little hands on with you at times, but you''re used to it. As you''re about to leave, he stops you. "Stop by the garage some time, I can always use a break and a quick fuck."'
 		elseif npc_rel['A158'] <= 20:
@@ -488,7 +488,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shulga':
 	elseif npc_rel['A11'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 300:
 		if grupTipe = 4:
 			'Vasily calls out to you as you approach. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, what''s up?"'
-			'You smile at him. "Not much. I thought I''d just come by and hang out with you for a bit."'
+			'You smile at him. "Not much. I thought I''d just come by and hang out with you."'
 			'The two of you engage in a friendly conversation about what''s been going on.'
 		else
 			'Vasily calls out to you as you approach. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, what''s up?"'
@@ -1003,26 +1003,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'alyona':
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_gopnik_chats', 'alyona_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_gopnik_chats', 'alyona_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_gopnik_chats', 'alyona_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_gopnik_chats', 'alyona_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1033,7 +1033,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'alyona_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big143.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Alyona," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A143'] >= 60:
 			if rand(1,2) = 1:
 				'"Ah fuck," she mumbles, fumbling around in her bag. "I think I- no wait. Here."'
@@ -1047,16 +1047,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'alyona_tampon':
 				'She shrugs apologetically, seeming a little embarrassed too.'
 			end
 		else
-			'"Just take one," she waves dismissively at her bag on the floor, taking another drink from her flask.'
+			'"Just take one," she waves dismissively at her bag on the floor before taking another drink from her flask.'
 			if rand(1,2) = 1:
 				'Not knowing what else to do, you start opening random zippers looking for a tampon. You find one jammed into a cramped pocket sandwiched between several blunts.'
 				'"Thanks," you say, raising it up to show her you found it.'
-				'"Yeah whatever," Alyona shrugs and you run off to the bathroom to put the tampon in before class starts.'
+				'"Yeah whatever," she shrugs and you run off to the bathroom to put the tampon in before class starts.'
 				isprok = 1
 			else
 				'Not knowing what else to do, you start opening random zippers looking for a tampon. You search every single pocket but don''t find a tampon anywhere.'
 				'"I can''t find any," you say.'
-				'"Then I don''t have any," Alyona shrugs. "Sorry."'
+				'"Then I don''t have any," she shrugs. "Sorry."'
 				'She picks the bag up with all the pockets still open and trudges off to class.'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1074,16 +1074,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'alyona_tampon':
 				'She shrugs apologetically, seeming a little embarrassed too.'
 			end
 		else
-			'"Just take one," she waves dismissively at her bag on the floor, taking another drink from her flask.'
+			'"Just take one," she waves dismissively at her bag on the floor before taking another drink from her flask.'
 			if rand(1,2) = 1:
 				'Not knowing what else to do, you start opening random zippers looking for a pad. Instead you find a tampon jammed into a cramped pocket sandwiched between several blunts.'
 				'"Can I take this?" you say, raising it up to show her.'
-				'"Yeah whatever," Alyona shrugs and you run off to the bathroom to put the tampon in before class starts.'
+				'"Yeah whatever," she shrugs and you run off to the bathroom to put the tampon in before class starts.'
 				isprok = 1
 			else
 				'Not knowing what else to do, you start opening random zippers looking for a tampon. You search every single pocket but don''t find a pad anywhere.'
 				'"I can''t find any," you say.'
-				'"Then I don''t have any," Alyona shrugs. "Sorry."'
+				'"Then I don''t have any," she shrugs. "Sorry."'
 				'She picks the bag up with all the pockets still open and trudges off to class.'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1267,7 +1267,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anushka':
 			'You sigh, unsure if she''s just teasing you or not. It''s hard to tell with Anushka. "No, I don''t want any steroids. I just wanted to hang out and talk is all."'
 			*nl
 			'She smirks. "Oh... So what flavor protein drink is best? I don''t like that powdered crap. I tried it once and it was nasty as Petia''s breath. I prefer liquid protein right from the tap if you know what I mean..." she says with a wink.'
-			'You shake your head, knowing exactly what she means and the two of you are soon talking about a variety of subjects. The two of you talk and laugh until the bell rings.' 
+			'You shake your head, knowing exactly what she means and the two of you are soon talking about a variety of subjects. You talk and laugh until the bell rings.' 
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
 		if npc_rel['A144'] >= 50:
@@ -1373,26 +1373,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anushka':
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_gopnik_chats', 'anushka_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_gopnik_chats', 'anushka_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_gopnik_chats', 'anushka_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_gopnik_chats', 'anushka_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1428,7 +1428,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anushka_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big144.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Anushka," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A144'] >= 50:
 			'"Yeah no problem," she says casually and reaches into her bag to pull one out.'
 			'"Thanks," you sigh in relief.'
@@ -1448,7 +1448,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anushka_tampon':
 			'"Happy to help," she smiles.'
 			'You smile back and run off to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		else
-			'"Pads huh?" she smirks teasingly as she reaches into her bag. "Didn''t know you were that kind of girl. Here, take a tampon."'
+			'"Pads, huh?" she smirks teasingly as she reaches into her bag. "Didn''t know you were that kind of girl. Here, take a tampon."'
 			'She holds one out for you.'
 			'"Thanks," you sigh in relief.'
 			'"Don''t worry about it," she smiles. "Wouldn''t wish this kind of thing on my worst enemy."'

+ 194 - 224
locations/gschool_jock_chats.qsrc

@@ -91,7 +91,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lazar':
 			'"Looks like the loser is lost." someone comments as you approach.' 
 			'"Nah, I bet even Lesco and Petia can''t stand being around her and, honestly, who can blame them?" Lazar replies, which gets the group laughing so hard you know it''s pointless to even try and talk to him.'
 		else
-			'You approach and try to talk to him, but he flat out ignores you and pretends you''re not there. After several minutes of this, he finally sighs loudly. "Can''t you take a fucking hint? No one wants to talk to you!" He then returns to ignoring you and you walk away.'
+			'You approach and try to talk to him, but he straight up ignores you and pretends you''re not there. After several minutes of this, he finally sighs loudly. "Can''t you take a fucking hint? No one wants to talk to you!" He then returns to ignoring you and you walk away.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -181,23 +181,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vanya':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big165.jpg"></center>'
 	if npc_rel['A165'] >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 225:
 		if grupTipe = 2:
-			'"Say <<$pcs_nickname>> did you hear about the prank I pulled on the football coach?" Vanya is having a hard time keeping himself from laughter.'
-			'"No, what did you do this time?" you curiously ask.'
+			'"Say <<$pcs_nickname>>, did you hear about the prank I pulled on the football coach?" Vanya is having a hard time stopping himself from laughing.'
+			'"No. What did you do this time?" you curiously ask.'
 			'"Well, during one of the training sessions, I unscrewed the top from a water bottle thinking one of the boys would drink it but here comes the coach, who grabs it. Just as he''s about to drink, the top falls off and water splashes all over him!" Vanya bursts out in laughter.'
 		else
 			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>! You need to help me hide!" Vanya is alarmingly looking around.'
 			'Feeling stressed, you ask. "What''s wrong?! Who''s after you?!"'
 			'Vanya cracks up seeing you panic. "Just kidding! I just wanted to see your reaction."'
-			'"Always the same thing Vanya. Don''t you get tired of playing games all the time?" you reprimand him.'
+			'"Always the same thing with you, Vanya. Don''t you get tired of playing games all the time?" you reprimand him.'
 		end
 	elseif npc_rel['A165'] <= 20 and fame['pav_slut'] < 225:
 		if grupTipe = 2:
-			'"What the hell Vanya!" you yell while angrily stomping towards him.'
+			'"What the hell, Vanya?!" you yell while angrily stomping towards him.'
 			'"What now?" he replies with an innocent look. "I''m getting tired of you accusing me of things I haven''t done!"'
 			'"It must''ve been you! Who else replaces talc powder with itching powder?!"'
 			'"No idea. What an amazing... I mean cruel joke though..." he replies.'
 		else
-			'"Funny joke you played on me there, dickhead." you angrily yell while pushing him.'
+			'"Funny joke you played on me there, dickhead!" you angrily yell while pushing him.'
 			'"What are you talking about? You''ve gone crazy!" he replies.'
 			'"I know it was you!" you yell in response.'
 			'"Oh yeah? Prove it then!" he yells back. You both stand in silence for a few seconds before you stomp off as Vanya grins from ear to ear.'
@@ -206,17 +206,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vanya':
 		'"Hey Vanya..." you sneakily greet him. "Want to hear a secret?" you ask.'
 		'Vanya turns towards you. "Hell yeah! I love secrets! Especially ones I can use against others as a joke."'
 		'"Well this one is special..." you snicker. "I saw you and Vicky having sex in the park..."'
-		'Vanya stops and thinks for a moment before grinning. "That''s the big secret? Well that''s nothing new. Vicky and I love to have sex outdoors." he winks.'
+		'Vanya stops and thinks for a second before grinning. "That''s the big secret? Well that''s nothing new. Vicky and I love to have sex outdoors," he winks.'
 	elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 225:
 		gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A8', 'dislike'
 		'"Are you up for a threesome with Vicky and me?" Vanya asks.'
 		'"What?" you ask surprised.'
 		'Vanya breaks out in a mischievous smile. "Yeah, you know. We''ve heard that you''ve become such a big slut, so we wanted to try a threesome."'
-		'"Hmm..." you start to think...'
-		'"Gross, I was just kidding! Like I would share Vicky with a slut like you."'
+		'"Hmm..." you start to think.'
+		'"Gross, I was just kidding!" he scorns. "Like I would share Vicky with a slut like you!"'
 	else
 		'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! Check this out!" Vanya yells out as he throws a crumbled paper ball at Vitek''s head.'
-		'He in turn quickly spins around and glares, trying to figure out who threw the crumbled paper. "Who was it?!" Vitek yells out. "Tell me who the fuck it was!"'
+		'He in turn quickly spins around and glares, trying to figure out who threw the crumbled paper. "Who did that?!" Vitek yells out. "Tell me who the fuck it was!"'
 		'"So easily agitated..." Vanya comments while you burst out in laughter over the stupid face Vitek is making.'
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -231,9 +231,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'erast':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big150.jpg"></center>'
 	if fame['pav_slut'] > 225:
 		if npc_rel['A150'] >= 50:
-			'You approach Erast and tap his shoulder. "Oh... Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+			'You approach Erast and tap his shoulder. "Oh... Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>," he says gently.'
 			'"Hi Erast. I just wanted to talk to you," you reply with a smile.'
-			'You start talking about different things, but see him glancing at the others, as if he was worried about being seen with you.'
+			'You start talking about different things, but see him glancing at the others, as if he''s worried about being seen with you.'
 			'"Am I not worthy to look at?" you ask jokingly, but you exactly know what''s going on.'
 			*nl
 			'"What? No. I mean, yes. You look..." He starts to check you out. You can tell he likes you, but unlike the others, he isn''t undressing you with his eyes and remains a gentleman, despite your reputation.'
@@ -245,9 +245,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'erast':
 			'"I just wanted to..." You would continue your sentence, but he''s already gone. It''s obvious he didn''t want to be seen with you.'
 			'There are a few minutes until the end of the break, so you decide to spend some time on your phone before going on your way.'
 		else
-			'You approach Erast and tap his shoulder. "Oh hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Am I in your way?"'
+			'You approach Erast and tap his shoulder. "Oh hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Am I in your way?" he asks.'
 			'"What do you mean?" you ask confusedly.'
-			'"I don''t know. Maybe you were looking for the toilets to retouch your makeup or something and I was in your way."'
+			'"I don''t know. Maybe you were looking for the toilets to retouch your makeup or something and I was in your way?"'
 			*nl
 			'He doesn''t want to be rude, but you understand he was referring to your reputation and the rumours about what you do in the toilets.'
 			'"Was that a hint that I should leave you alone or maybe you want me to go there?" you wink.'
@@ -401,7 +401,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 			NatbelQW['chrispaid'] = 3
 			NatbelQW['evt_day'] = daystart
 			gs 'stat'
-			
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big18.jpg"></center>'
 			'You see Christina chatting with Lina as you approach. When she notices you, she glares at you before turning to Lina.'
 			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves before Christina turns back to you. "What do you want?"'
@@ -427,9 +426,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 		if LariskaQW['story'] = 3:
 			LariskaQW['story'] = 4
 			christinaQW['blackmail'] = 2
-			'Walking up to Christina, you quietly say "I need to talk to you."'
+			'"I need to talk to you," you quietly say as you approach Christina.'
 			'"What do you want? I''m busy," she says, not even looking at you.'
-			'Taking a deep breath, you say "Lariska. I want Lariska."'
+			'You take a deep breath. "Lariska. I want Lariska."'
 			'Suprised, she finally looks at you. "No, <<$pcs_nickname>>. She''s mine, and I don''t want you filling her head with nonsense."'
 			'"Well, the thing is you don''t really have a choice. Not a good one anyway." Pulling out your phone and checking to make sure nobody''s looking, you show her a picture of her blowing the coach.'
 			'Her face turns bright red with anger and she hisses at you. "You fucking bitch! How did you get that?! If you show anybody..."'
@@ -439,7 +438,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 			'"Oh, and if you try and punish her for this, I will know," the threat clear on your face. Turning on your heels, you head off to your next class, smiling.'
 		else
 			christinaQW['blackmail'] = 2
-			'Walking up to Christina, you quietly say "I need to talk to you."'
+			'"I need to talk to you," you quietly say as you approach Christina.'
 			'"What do you want? I''m busy," she says, not even looking at you.'
 			'"Oh, I just wanted you to know I have something you should see." Pulling out your phone and checking to make sure nobody is looking, you show her a picture of her blowing the coach.'
 			'Her face turns bright red with anger and she hisses at you. "You fucking bitch! How did you get that?! If you show anybody..."'
@@ -454,7 +453,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 		'Christina takes one look at you coming over to talk with her. "What now?"'
 		'"Nothing," you say cheerfully. "Just came over to say hi."'
 		'"Well don''t. We''re not friends. You got what you wanted, now leave me alone unless it''s important."'
-		'Giving her your best obvious fake smile you say "Now don''t be like that. I thought we were great friends!"'
+		'"Now don''t be like that. I thought we were great friends!" you say while giving her your best fake smile.'
 		'"Whatever." Giving you a dirty look, she heads off to her next class, and you do the same, chuckling to yourself.'
 	elseif christinaQW['fight'] = 1:
 		if LariskaQW['story'] = 3: LariskaQW['story'] = 4
@@ -465,11 +464,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 		if fame['pav_slut'] >= 200:
 			'"What does the biggest school slut want from me? Don''t you have a cock to suck somewhere?" Christina asks mockingly.'
 			'"Shut up Christina! I''m tired of your bullshit," you tiredly reply.'
-			'"Poor little thing. It must''ve been, what, at least a few minutes since you last spread your legs for someone?" She begins to laugh as she walks away.'
+			'"Poor little thing. It must''ve been what, five minutes since you last spread your legs for someone?" She begins to laugh as she walks away.'
 		else
 			if grupTipe = 2:
 				'"Look at the biggest joke among us. You shouldn''t even be allowed to call yourself a jock. What a joke..." Christina shakes her head.'
-				'You fiercely reply. "Oh, yeah? I could beat you in whatever you want. Just name the time and place."'
+				'"Oh yeah? I could beat you at whatever you want! Just name the time and place!" you fiercely reply.'
 				'"Hmmrph!!" Christina looks angrily at you. "You know what? I don''t have time for this right now!" She crosses her arms and refuses to say another word to you.'
 			else
 				'"Why are you trying to talk to me? I don''t speak to people like you."'
@@ -482,12 +481,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 	! Natasha quest line:
 
 	if christinaQW['fight'] = 1 and NatbelQW['FriendLover'] = 2:
-			act 'Talk to Christina':
+		act 'Talk to Christina':
 			NatbelQW['chrispaid'] = 1
-			'You see Christina chatting with Lina when as approach. When Christina notices you, she glares at you and then turns to Lina.'
+			'You see Christina chatting with Lina as you approach. When Christina notices you, she glares at you and then turns to Lina.'
 			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves before Christina turns back to you. "What do you want?"'
 			'You ignore her attitude. "I wanted to talk about how you treat Natasha."'
-			'"What about it?" she snaps. "It''s not any of your business!"'
+			'"What about it?" she snaps. "It''s not like it''s any of your business!"'
 			'"Actually, it is. She''s my friend, so I''m telling you to stop so I don''t have to beat your ass in front of everyone again."'
 			'Christina doesn''t answer, so you continue. "So we''re in agreement then? Unless you want to go another round with me? I hope not, because I won''t stop at a simple beating this time!"'
 			'She nods in agreement before storming off. With a grin on your face, you head to your next class.'
@@ -498,7 +497,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 			'You see Christina chatting with Lina when as approach. When Christina notices you, she glares at you and then turns to Lina.'
 			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves before Christina turns back to you. "What do you want?"'
 			'You ignore her attitude. "I wanted to talk about how you treat Natasha."'
-			'"What about it?" she snaps. "It''s not any of your business!"'
+			'"What about it?" she snaps. "It''s not like it''s any of your business!"'
 			'"Actually, it is. She''s my friend, so I''m asking you to stop because I don''t want to embarrass you in front of the others."'
 			'"Fucking make me," she scoffs, so you pull out your phone and show her your recording of her blowing the coach.'
 			'She balls her fists in rage. "So we''re in agreement then? Unless you want everyone to see this?" you ask smugly.'
@@ -513,25 +512,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 		act 'Think about Christina': gt 'Zvereva_events', 'christina_decide2'
 	end
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"My... my period started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'christina_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
 				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"My... my period started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'christina_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'christina_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
 				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'christina_tampon'
 			end
@@ -546,18 +545,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina_tampon':
 	'"Oh this ought to be good..." She looks at you flatly.'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
 	'She looks at you in surprise.'
-	'"You mean if I don''t give you a tampon, your panties are going to get stained and blood is going to run all down your thighs and get all over your seat and embarrass yourself in front of the whole class?"'
+	'"You mean if I don''t give you a tampon, your panties are going to get stained and blood is going to run all down your thighs, get all over your seat and embarrass you in front of the whole class?"'
 	if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-		'"Yes!" you hiss urgently. Christina stops to stare at you for a few moments. "I really need your help."'
+		'"Yes!" you hiss urgently. Christina stops to stare at you for a few seconds. "I really need your help!"'
 	else
 		'"Not exactly," you mumble, deeply aware of your <i>lack</i> of panties and how it''s going to very quickly skip that step. "But yes, I really need your help."'
 	end
 	*nl
-	'Then she smiles.'
+	'She just smiles.'
 	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"My... my period started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
-		'"Ha! That''s the best thing I''ve heard all day! Fuck you, enjoy humiliation loser!" she grins, flipping you the bird as she walking off leaving you with absolutely nothing.'
+		'"Ha! That''s the best thing I''ve heard all day! Fuck you, enjoy the humiliation loser!" she grins, flipping you the bird as she walks away and leaves you with absolutely nothing.'
 	else
-		'"Ha! That''s the best thing I''ve heard all day! Fuck you, enjoy humiliation!" she grins, flipping you the bird as she steps off, calling over her shoulder as she walks away, "And start using tampons you fucking loser! Nobody uses pads anymore!"'
+		'"Ha! That''s the best thing I''ve heard all day! Fuck you, enjoy the humiliation!" she grins, flipping you the bird as she walks away. "And start using tampons you fucking loser! Nobody uses pads anymore!" she calls back over her shoulder.'
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 end
@@ -690,26 +689,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina':
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'albina_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'albina_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'albina_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'albina_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -720,51 +719,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big23.jpg"></center>'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
-		if AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2:
-			'Your friend''s eyes go wide.'
-			'"Yes! Of course!" she says, immediately digging into her purse and coming up with a tampon. "Why are you even asking! Just take it and go before something starts spilling out!"'
-			'You nod gratefully and run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in.'
-		elseif npc_rel['A23'] >= 70:
-			'Albina blinks.'
-			'"Oh! Shit. Yeah, let me get one," she says, immediately digging into her purse and coming up with a tampon. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Albina."'
-			'"Don''t worry about it," she shakes her head. "Typical woman problem, am I right?"'
-			'She gives you a sympathetic look and you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in.'
-		elseif npc_rel['A23'] > 20:
-			'Albina blinks.'
-			'"Huh? Oh. Uh... Yeah, let me get one," she says, quickly digging into her purse and coming up with a tampon. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Albina."'
-			'"Don''t worry about it," she shakes her head. "Typical woman problem, am I right?"'
-			'She gives you a sympathetic look and you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in.'
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Albina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+		if AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2 or npc_rel['A23'] >= 70:
+			'She gives you a sympathetic look. "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I don''t have any. I''m on birth control and don''t get periods..."'
+			'"Oh..." you nod understandingly.'
+			'"I''d help if I could, I really would," she says with an apologetic smile.'
 		else
-			'She gives you a look.'
-			'"Seriously? Ugh." She starts rifling through her purse and comes up with a tampon. "What kind of idiot doesn''t keep tampons in her purse? Here."'
-			'"Thanks Albina."'
-			'"Don''t mention it," she glares. "Literally. Now fuck off."'
-			'You avoid her gaze and do as she asks, running off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in.'
+			'"Suuuure, just give me a few rubles," she replies and you just stare blankly at her. "Do I look like a fucking dispenser to you?" she scorns. "What kind of idiot doesn''t keep tampons in her purse?"'
+			'"Do you have any?" you ask in a desperate plea, but she shakes her head.'
+			'"No, I''m on birth control and don''t get periods. You need to deal with this yourself, preferably before it starts running down your leg." She then walks away, leaving you to your predicament.'
 		end
 	else
-		if AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2:
-			'Your friend''s eyes go wide.'
-			'"I don''t have any pads, only tampons, is that alright?" she says, immediately digging into her purse and coming up with a tampon. "Why are you still using pads? Never mind that! Just take it and go before something starts spilling out!"'
-		elseif npc_rel['A23'] >= 70:
-			'Albina blinks.'
-			'"Oh! Shit. I only have tampons," she says, immediately digging into her purse and coming up with one. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Albina."'
-			'"Don''t worry about it," she shakes her head. "Typical woman problem, am I right?"'
-			'She gives you a sympathetic look and you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in.'
-		elseif npc_rel['A23'] > 20:
-			'Albina blinks.'
-			'"Huh? Oh. Uh... I only have tampons," she says, quickly digging into her purse and coming up with one. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Albina."'
-			'"Don''t worry about it," she shakes her head. "Typical woman problem, am I right?"'
-			'She gives you a sympathetic look and you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in.'
+		if AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2 or npc_rel['A23'] >= 70:
+			'She gives you a bewildered look. "Why are you still using pads? Sorry, but I don''t have anything like that. I''m on birth control and don''t get periods."'
+			'"Oh..." you nod understandingly.'
+			'"I''d help if I could, I really would," she says with an apologetic smile.'
 		else
-			'She gives you a look.'
-			'"Seriously? Ugh." She starts rifling through her purse and comes up with a tampon. "What kind of idiot doesn''t keep tampons in her purse? Here."'
-			'"Thanks Albina."'
-			'"Don''t mention it," she glares. "Literally. Now fuck off."'
+			'She gives you a stern look. "Do I look like a fucking dispenser to you? What kind of idiot doesn''t keep tampons in her purse? And why are you still using pads?!"'
+			'"Do you have any?" you ask in a desperate plea, but she shakes her head.'
+			'"No, I''m on birth control and don''t get periods. You need to deal with this yourself, preferably before it starts running down your leg." She then walks away, leaving you to your predicament.'
 		end
 	end
 	isprok = 1
@@ -895,7 +868,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'veronika':
 			'Veronika is leaning against the wall and checking something on her phone when you decide to approach her.'
 			'"He..." you start to greet her when she looks up and notices you standing in front of her.'
 			'"Don''t even start..." she coldly replies. As she looks up and her sight meets yours, you see her piercing, cold glare that could freeze the sun.'
-			'Understand you''re not welcome, you go back to your classroom and try to kill the time until the next lesson starts.'
+			'Understanding you''re not welcome, you go back to your classroom and try to kill the time until the next lesson starts.'
 		else
 			'"Hey Veronika!" you greet her as you approach.'
 			'"Oh... Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>..." she replies indifferently.'
@@ -906,26 +879,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'veronika':
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'veronika_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'veronika_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'veronika_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'veronika_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -936,43 +909,43 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'veronika_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big141.jpg"></center>'
 
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Veronika," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A141'] >= 70:
 			'"Yeah, of course," she says calmly, immediately digging into her backpack and coming up with a tampon. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Veronika."'
+			'"Thanks, Veronika."'
 			'"It''s fine," she shrugs. "I have a huge stash for competitions."'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A141'] > 20:
 			'She gives you a look.'
 			'"Sure I guess," she sighs, digging into her backpack and coming up with a tampon. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Veronika."'
+			'"Thanks, Veronika."'
 			'"It''s fine," she shrugs. "I have a huge stash for competitions. That''s not permission to use me as a dispenser though."'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		else
 			'She gives you a look.'
-			'"... fine," she says begrudgingly and makes a big show of digging through her backpack and coming up with a tampon. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Veronika."'
+			'"... Fine," she says begrudgingly and makes a big show of digging through her backpack and coming up with a tampon. "Here."'
+			'"Thanks, Veronika."'
 			'"Whatever," she shrugs.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A141'] >= 70:
 			'"I''ve only got tampons," she says calmly, immediately digging into her backpack and coming up with one. "Here."'
 			'"Thanks Veronika."'
 			'"It''s fine," she shrugs. "I have a huge stash."'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A141'] > 20:
 			'She gives you a look.'
 			'"Sure I guess," she sighs, digging into her backpack. "But I''ve only got tampons. Here."'
 			'"Thanks Veronika."'
 			'"It''s fine," she shrugs. "I have a huge stash for competitions. That''s not permission to use me as a dispenser though."'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		else
 			'She gives you a look.'
-			'"... fine," she says begrudgingly and makes a big show of digging through her backpack and coming up with a tampon. "But I don''t have any pads. I''m an ice skater, not a nerd, remember? Here."'
-			'"Thanks Veronika."'
+			'"... Fine," she says begrudgingly and makes a big show of digging through her backpack and coming up with a tampon. "But I don''t have any pads. I''m an ice skater, not a nerd, remember? Here."'
+			'"Thanks, Veronika."'
 			'"Whatever," she shrugs.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		end
 	end
 	isprok = 1
@@ -991,10 +964,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina':
 			'Looking around to make sure nobody is watching, you lean in and whisper back, telling her about some of your latest sexual adventures.'
 			'When your story is done, she leans back against the wall, a dreamy look on her face.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A19'] <= 20:
-			'"Christina says that you fuck anyone." Lina says while glaring at you.'
+			'"Christina says that you fuck anyone," Lina says while glaring at you.'
 			'"Christina doesn''t know what she''s talking about it," you reply.'
 			'"I knew it! It''s true isn''t it? Christina is always correct... Go and suck someone off!" she fires back.'
-			'"Whatever, bitch. Like you know anything about me," you laugh, and walk away.'
+			'"Whatever, bitch. Like you know anything about me," you scorn as you walk away.'
 		else
 			'Lina gives you a strange look, like she has something to say but she''s afraid to be seen talking to you. Unable to help herself, she says "What''s it like?"'
 			'Confused, you ask "What is what like?"'
@@ -1007,9 +980,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina':
 			'"Hi Lina," you reply. "What''s new with you?"'
 			'The two of you spend the break chatting about various things until it ends.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A19'] <= 20:
-			'Lina sees you coming over to her, and says "You just think you''re so cool. You will never be as cool as Christina."'
-			'You have a mental picture of Christina wearing a fancy dress with her hair done, and cannot help but laugh out loud.'
-			'Your laugh causes her face to turn bright red. "You fucking bitch. You will get yours someday."'
+			'Lina sees you coming over to her. "You just think you''re so cool. You''ll never be as cool as Christina!" she says.'
+			'You have a mental picture of Christina wearing a fancy dress with her hair done, and can''t help but laugh out loud.'
+			'Your laugh causes her face to turn bright red. "You fucking bitch! You''ll get yours someday!"'
 		else
 			'"Hey, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Did you see the last track race?"'
 			'"Sorry, Lina. I don''t really watch those."'
@@ -1019,7 +992,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina':
 	elseif grupTipe = 2:
 		if npc_rel['A19'] >= 60:
 			'Lina sees you and proudly says "I''ve finally been improving my lap times!"'
-			'"Great news! I''m glad you''re improving." you encouragingly tell her.'
+			'"Great news! I''m glad you''re improving!" you encouragingly tell her.'
 			'Lina nods. "Yeah, the new workout plan that Christina made for me is really great. She''s really helped me out a lot."'
 			+$OpenInnerThought+'There she goes, worshipping Christina.'+$CloseInnerThought
 		elseif npc_rel['A19'] <= 20:
@@ -1028,29 +1001,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina':
 			'Lina mockingly replies. "It''s just something me and the other girls were discussing and I just wanted you to know that."'
 			'"Come face me then and I''ll show you who''s the worse athlete!" You fire back. Deciding this conversation has lasted long enough, you walk away.'
 		else
-			'"What do you want <<$pcs_nickname>>? Christina is looking for me..." Lina says irritatingly.'
-			'"I wanted to ask you if you had the notes from the class. I need to copy it." you tell her.'
-			'"We''ll do it later. I have to find Christina right away or else she''ll get mad..." Lina excuses herself.'
+			'"What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>? Christina is looking for me..." Lina says irritatingly.'
+			'"I wanted to ask you if you had the notes from the class. I need to copy them," you tell her.'
+			'"We''ll do it later. I have to find Christina right away or else she''ll get mad..." She quickly excuses herself.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
 		if npc_rel['A19'] >= 60:
-			'Looking up from her schoolbook and seeing you coming, she shows you her book and asks "What''s the answer to this problem."'
-			'"42. Come on, that''s an easy one."'
-			'"I wasn''t paying attention when the teacher was talking about how to do the problem, Christina was texting me. She wants to know what I''m wearing to the dance this weekend when we go."'
-			'"Why does that matter?"'
-			'Looking a bit confused, she says "I don''t know. Maybe she wants us to match or something."'
-			+$OpenInnerThought+'Yeah right. She probably wanted to make sure she is wearing something better then Lina.'+$CloseInnerThought
-			'You walk away, leaving Lina looking all dreamy-eyed thinking about her and Christina wearing the same clothes. She probbably didn''t even see you leave.'
+			'Looking up from her schoolbook and seeing you coming, she shows you her book and asks "What''s the answer to this problem?"'
+			'"42," you reply. Come on, that''s an easy one!"'
+			'"I wasn''t paying attention to the teacher because Christina was texting me. She wants to know what I''m wearing to the dance this weekend."'
+			'"Why does that matter?" you ask.'
+			'"I don''t know. Maybe she wants us to match or something?" she replies, looking a little confused.'
+			+$OpenInnerThought+'Yeah right. She probably wanted to make sure she''s wearing something better then Lina.'+$CloseInnerThought
+			'You walk away, leaving Lina looking all dreamy-eyed thinking about her and Christina wearing the same clothes. She probably didn''t even see you leaving.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A19'] <= 20:
 			'"Unless you''re here to do my homework, get lost nerd."'
 			'"What did I ever do to you, Lina?"'
 			'"Christina hates you. That''s good enough for me."'
-			'"Right... ok bye." You get out of there before things get heated.'
+			'"Right... Bye then." You get out of there before things get heated.'
 		else
-			'Seeing you come up to talk to her, Lina raises an eyebrow. "You sure you want to be seen here? I thought nerds were supposed to be smart."'
+			'Seeing you coming up to talk to her, Lina raises an eyebrow. "You sure you want to be seen here? I thought nerds were supposed to be smart."'
 			'"Don''t be mean, Lina. I''m just saying hello."'
-			'"Hi." You might want to leave before somebody runs you out.'
-			'Sighing, you say "Alright, fine. I can take the hint." You walk away before anybody starts messing with you.'
+			'"Hi," she replies. "Now leave before somebody runs you out."'
+			'You sigh. "Alright, fine. I can take the hint." You walk away before anybody starts messing with you.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
 		if npc_rel['A19'] >= 60:
@@ -1058,72 +1031,72 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina':
 				'"Why don''t you have any tattoos, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 				'"I don''t know," you say with a shrug.'
 				'"I''m surprised the other gopniks let you hang around without at least one. Like an initiation or something."'
-				'Laughing, you say "We aren''t a gang, Lina."'
-				'"Ok," she says, not sounding convinced.'
+				'"We aren''t a gang, Lina," you reply with a laugh.'
+				'"Okay..." she says, not sounding convinced.'
 				'"If you don''t believe me, just look after the next gym class. We don''t all have tattoos."'
-				'Starting to laugh, she says "Yeah, I''m sure the other girls wouldn''t mind me checking for tattoos. Especially Lena and Lera."'
-				'You both end up laughing harder at the thought, and gossip the rest of the break away.'
+				'She laughs. "Yeah, I''m sure the other girls wouldn''t mind me checking for tattoos. Especially Lena and Lera."'
+				'You both end up laughing at the thought, and gossip the rest of the break away.'
 			else
 				'Lina sees you coming and asks "Does getting a tattoo hurt?"'
 				'"A little. Why, are you thinking about getting one?"'
-				'"Hell no. Christina would beat my ass if I did. She says..." Lina starts to go on a tirade about Christina''s views on tattoos and the people who get them when she remembbers who she is talking to. "Err... sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+				'"Hell no. Christina would beat my ass if I did. She says..." She goes on a tirade about Christina''s views on tattoos and the people who get them when she remembers who she''s talking to. "Err... sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 				'"You should make your own mind up about things, Lina."'
 				'You spend the rest of your break trying to get her to open her mind to new ideas, but you''re pretty sure it had no effect.'
 			end
 		elseif npc_rel['A19'] <= 20:
 			'Lina sees you coming and seems to get nervous. "I don''t speak to your kind. Go away!"'
 			'"My <i>kind</i>?"'
-			'As you come closer she shrinks back. "Just go away!"'
-			'You see the other jocks starting to look your way, and decide it''s best to leave for now.'
+			'As you come closer, she shrinks back. "Just go away!"'
+			'You see the other jocks starting to look your way, and decide it''s best to leave.'
 		else
 			'"Why do you people always get tattoos? Christina says they look awful."'
 			if tatarm = 0 or tatass = 0 or tatback = 0 or tatblly = 0 or tatbrst = 0 or tatchst = 0 or tatfce = 0 or tatankle = 0 or tathand = 0 or tatleg = 0 or tatlip = 0 or tatneck = 0 or tatvag = 0 or tatlech = 0 or tatside = 0 or tatupb = 0 or tatunder = 0 or tatwrist = 0:
 				'"What are you talking about? I don''t have any tattoos."'
 				'"It''s just a matter of time then."'
-				'"Wow. Ok, bye bitch." With that said you just walk away.'
+				'"Wow. Okay, bye bitch." With that said, you just walk away.'
 			else
 				'"My body is a work of art. Don''t be jealous of that."'
-				'"I''m not jealous! Eww. Why would I want that crap on me."'
-				'"Ok, did Christina not let you eat her out today or something? You''re in a bad mood." With that said you just walk away.'
+				'"I''m not jealous! Eww. Why would I want that crap on me?"'
+				'"Okay, did Christina not let you eat her out today or something? You''re in a bad mood." With that said, you just walk away.'
 			end
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A19'] >= 60:
 			'Lina sees you walking over to her and looks uncomfortable.'
-			'Giving her your best smile, you ask "How are you Lina?"'
-			'I''m fine. Look, I like you, but I cannot be seen talking to you.'
+			'"How are you, Lina?" you ask while giving her your best smile.'
+			'"I''m fine," she replies. "Look, I like you, but I can''t be seen talking to you."'
 		elseif npc_rel['A19'] <= 20:
-			'Teasingly, you ask "So, where''s the old ball and chain?"'
-			'"Oh shut up, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Don''t you have anything better to do? At least I have a friend unlike <i>some</i> people." Lina fires back.'
+			'"So, where''s the old ball and chain?" you ask teasingly.'
+			'"Oh shut up, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Don''t you have anything better to do? At least I have a friend unlike <i>some</i> people..." she fires back.'
 		else	
 			'Lina sees you walking over to her and looks uncomfortable.'
-			'Giving her your best smile, you ask "How are you Lina?"'
-			'I''m sorry, but I cannot be seen talking to you.'
+			'"How are you, Lina?" you ask while giving her your best smile.'
+			'"I''m sorry, but I can''t be seen talking to you."'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'lina_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'lina_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'lina_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'lina_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1134,39 +1107,39 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big19.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lina," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A19'] >= 70:
 			'She looks around before quickly digging through her backpack for a tampon. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Lina."'
+			'"Thanks, Lina."'
 			'"Just don''t tell Christina," she whispers. "I know how she feels about you. She''d be pissed."'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 			isprok = 1
 		elseif npc_rel['A19'] > 20:
 			'She looks around before hesitantly digging through her backpack for a tampon. "Here."'
-			'"Thanks Lina."'
+			'"Thanks, Lina."'
 			'"Just don''t tell Christina," she whispers. "I know how she feels about you. She''d be pissed."'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 			isprok = 1
 		else
-			'"No fucking way." She gives you a look. "Take care of yourself you dumb bimbo."'
-			'With that she walks away, leaving you bleeding out your snatch in the middle of the hallway.'
+			'"No fucking way!" She gives you a look. "Take care of yourself, you dumb bimbo!'
+			'She then walks away, leaving you in the middle of the hallway.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A19'] >= 70:
 			'She looks around before quickly digging through her backpack. "I only have tampons."'
-			'"Thanks Lina."'
+			'"Thanks, Lina."'
 			'"Just don''t tell Christina," she whispers. "I know how she feels about you. She''d be pissed."'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 			isprok = 1
 		elseif npc_rel['A19'] > 20:
 			'She looks around before hesitantly digging through her backpack. "I only have tampons."'
-			'"Thanks Lina."'
+			'"Thanks, Lina."'
 			'"Just don''t tell Christina," she whispers. "I know how she feels about you. She''d be pissed."'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 			isprok = 1
 		else
-			'"No fucking way." She gives you a look. "Take care of yourself you dumb bimbo. And who the fuck uses pads?"'
-			'With that she walks away, leaving you cramping in the middle of the hallway.'
+			'"No fucking way!" She gives you a look. "Take care of yourself, you dumb bimbo! And who the fuck uses pads?"'
+			'She then walks away, leaving you cramping in the middle of the hallway.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -1186,8 +1159,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 				'When she sees the ball, her eyes grow wide and she looks around fearfully. Seeing that Christina is engrossed in her conversation with Lina, she snatches the ball and stuffs it out of sight.'
 				'"I''m sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>. If Christina finds out I was there instead of the sports center like I told her I would be..."'
 				'"Then why were you there?" you ask her teasingly, pretty sure you already know the answer.'
-				'Her face and neck turn bright red. "I-I...uh...I..." she stammers as she tries to think of an excuse, unwilling to admit the truth.'
-				'"Relax," you say laughing. "I beat the shit out of her, so she knows better then to deny me something I want. Just ask her about it the next time you get a chance, ok?"'
+				'Her face turns bright red. "I-I...Uh...I..." she stammers as she tries to think of an excuse, unwilling to admit the truth.'
+				'"Relax," you say laughing. "I beat the shit out of her, so she knows better then to deny me something I want. Just ask her about it the next time you get a chance, okay?"'
 				'She looks at you, a bit dazed, but manages to nod.'
 				'Giving her a soft smile, you head off to your next class.'
 			elseif christinaQW['blackmail'] >= 2 or christinaQW['subpath'] >= 2:
@@ -1197,8 +1170,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 				'When she sees the ball, her eyes grow wide and she looks around fearfully. Seeing that Christina is engrossed in her conversation with Lina, she snatches the ball and stuffs it out of sight.'
 				'"I''m sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>. If Christina finds out I was there instead of the sports center like I told her I would be..."'
 				'"Then why were you there?" you ask her teasingly, pretty sure you already know the answer.'
-				'Her face and neck turn bright red. "I-I...uh...I..." she stammers as she tries to think of an excuse, unwilling to admit the truth.'
-				'"Relax," you say laughing. "I already talked to her and she agreed to let you hang out with me outside of school. I promise. Just ask her about it the next time you get a chance, ok?"'
+				'Her face turns bright red. "I-I...Uh...I..." she stammers as she tries to think of an excuse, unwilling to admit the truth.'
+				'"Relax," you say laughing. "I already talked to her and she agreed to let you hang out with me outside of school. I promise. Just ask her about it the next time you get a chance, okay?"'
 				'She looks at you, a bit dazed, but manages to nod.'
 				'Giving her a soft smile, you head off to your next class.'
 			else
@@ -1208,11 +1181,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 				'When she sees the ball, her eyes go wide and she looks around fearfully. Seeing that Christina is engrossed in her conversation with Lina, she snatches the ball and stuffs it out of sight.'
 				'"I''m sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>. If Christina finds out I was there instead of the sports center like I told her I would be..."'
 				'"Then why were you there?" you ask her teasingly, pretty sure you already know the answer.'
-				'Her face and neck turn bright red. "I-I...uh...I..." she stammers as she tries to think of an excuse, unwilling to admit the truth.'
-				'"Relax," you say laughing. "I am pretty sure I already know," you say with a twinkle in your eye.'
-				'Her face flushes again, but all she says is "Don''t tell Christina I was there. She doesn''t like me hanging around you. She hates you, always has."'
+				'Her face turns bright red. "I-I...Uh...I..." she stammers as she tries to think of an excuse, unwilling to admit the truth.'
+				'"Relax," you say laughing. "I''m pretty sure I already know," you say with a twinkle in your eye.'
+				'Her face flushes again. "Don''t tell Christina I was there! She doesn''t like me hanging around you. She hates you, always has."'
 				'"I know, though I have no idea why. But don''t worry, I''ll figure out a way for her to agree to let us hang out. Or eliminate the need for her approval."'
-				'Lariska''s eyes grow wide, but she just says, "Just be careful, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I don''t want her to hurt you because of me."'
+				'Lariska''s eyes grow wide. "Just be careful, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I don''t want her to hurt you because of me."'
 				'"I can take it, sweetie. Especially when it''s worth it." You give her a sweet smile and head off to class.'
 			end
 		elseif LariskaQW['story'] = 3:
@@ -1220,25 +1193,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 			if christinaQW['blackmail'] >= 2 or christinaQW['subpath'] >= 2 or christinaQW['fight'] = 1:
 				LariskaQW['story'] = 5
 				gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A13', 'like'
-				'"Ok, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I guess Christina wont stop me from hanging out with you now." She smiles a bit shyly and says "Do you want to come over afterschool and work on our homework together?"'
-				'You smile in response, and say "Sure, Lariska. I will meet up with you afterschool!"'
-				'She blushes a bit and says "Good, I''m looking forward to it!"'
+				'"Okay, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I guess Christina won''t stop me from hanging out with you now." She smiles shyly. "Do you want to come over after school and work on our homework together?"'
+				'You smile in response. "Sure. I''ll meet up with you after school!"'
+				'She blushes a little. "Good, I''m looking forward to it!"'
 			else
-				'"Hey, Lariska! How is your day going?"'
-				'"I''m sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I told you, Christina doesn''t really want me hanging out with you after school."'
+				'"Hey Lariska! How''s your day going?"'
+				'"I''m sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I already told you that Christina doesn''t want me hanging out with you after school."'
 				'"I know Lariska, I''m working on it. In the meantime, I was just saying hi."'
-				'"O-Oh. I''m sorry, I just keep thinking about it. Hopefully you will manage to convince her." She gives you a sad smile.'
+				'"O-Oh. I''m sorry, I just keep thinking about it. Hopefully you''ll manage to convince her." She gives you a sad smile.'
 				'"Hang in there, sweetie. I''ll convince her, I promise."'
 			end
 		elseif LariskaQW['story'] = 4:
 			LariskaQW['story'] = 5
 			gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A13', 'like'
-			'"Ok, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I guess Christina wont stop me from hanging out with you now." She smiles a bit shyly and says "Do you want to come over afterschool and work on our homework together?"'
-			'You smile in response, and say "Sure, Lariska. I will meet up with you afterschool!"'
-			'She blushes a bit and says "Good, I''m looking forward to it!"'
+			'"Okay <<$pcs_nickname>>. I guess Christina won''t stop me from hanging out with you now." She smiles shyly. "Do you want to come over after school and work on our homework together?"'
+			'You smile in response. "Sure thing, Lariska. I''ll meet up with you after school!"'
+			'She blushes a little. "Good, I''m looking forward to it!"'
 		else
 			gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A13', 'love'
-			'"Hey, cutie," you say when you see Lariska. She blushes a little, but still smiles at you. You spend the rest of the break chatting with her.'
+			'"Hey cutie," you say when you see Lariska. She blushes a little, but still smiles at you. You spend the rest of the break chatting with her.'
 		end
 	else
 		gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A13', 'like'
@@ -1249,11 +1222,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 			elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20:
 				'"Aren''t you looking for a cock to suck you big slut?" Lariska says mockingly.'
 				'"Shut up Lariska! Don''t you have Christina''s tail to run after or something?" you tiredly reply.'
-				'"Poor little slut. Go chase another cock." she begins to laugh as she walks away.'
+				'"Poor little slut. Go chase another cock," she laughs as she walks away.'
 			else
-				'Seeing you in the hallway, Lariska can''t help but ask "Why are <i>you</i> here? The boys bathroom is that way, I''m sure they''re missing you right now."'
-				'Giving her you best sultry look, you respond with "I take care of girls too. Wanna try?"'
-				'She gives you a shocked look, her face turning red at the same time. "Go away, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+				'Seeing you in the hallway, Lariska can''t help but scowl. "Why are <i>you</i> here? The boys bathroom is that way, I''m sure they''re missing you right now."'
+				'You respond by giving her your best sultry look. "I take care of girls too. Wanna try?"'
+				'She gives you a shocked look as her face turns bright red. "Go away, <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
 			end
 		elseif grupTipe = 1:
 			if npc_rel['A13'] >= 50:
@@ -1267,12 +1240,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 				'"The other kids may think you''re cool, but I know better!"'
 				'"Well, that''s one way to start a conversation, I guess."'
 				'"Pass, bitch. I would rather not talk with you at all."'
-				'"Okay... who is the bitch now." You walk away before this gets heated.'
+				'"Okay... Who''s actually the bitch here?" You walk away before this gets heated.'
 			else
 				'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! I need help with a thing and I think you''re the perfect person that can help me out." Lariska smiles.'
 				'Curious, you ask "What do you need help with?"'
 				'"Well... I need to impress Christina and need your help with coming up with something fitting..." she starts on a long tirade about what might impress Christina.'
-				'Feeling your braincells slowly dying, and interrupt her instead. "Well, I got to head to class, I got this thing. Bye."'
+				'Feeling your braincells slowly dying, you interrupt her instead. "Well, I''ve got to head to class. Got this thing to do. Bye!"'
 			end
 		elseif grupTipe = 2:
 			if npc_rel['A13'] >= 50:
@@ -1280,7 +1253,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 				'"No, why?" You can sense the desperation in her demeanor.'
 				'"Well Lina was running after her and I don''t want to be left out..." She dismayingly looks at you.'
 				'"Listen Lariska." You grab hold of her. "You don''t need to run after anyone. You''re fine on your own, okay? Now stop worrying and head to class instead."'
-				'Blushing, she nods. "I''ll try."'
+				'She nods while blushing. "I''ll try."'
 				'You spend the rest of break chatting with her, trying to take her mind off Christina.'
 			elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20:
 				'"I sure beat your ass during gym class. You had no chance against me!" Lariska is gleefully trash-talking you.'
@@ -1291,25 +1264,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 				'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! I need help with a thing and I think you''re the perfect person that can help me out." Lariska smiles.'
 				'Curious, you ask "What do you need help with?"'
 				'"Well... I need to impress Christina and need your help with coming up with something fitting..." she starts on a long tirade about what might impress Christina.'
-				'Feeling your braincells slowly dying, and interrupt her instead. "Well, I got to head to class, I got this thing. Bye."'
+				'Feeling your braincells slowly dying, you interrupt her instead. "Well, I''ve got to head to class. Got this thing to do. Bye!"'
 			end
 		elseif grupTipe = 3:
 			if npc_rel['A13'] >= 50:
 				'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>. When are you going to stop staring at books and come play some sports with us?"'
 				'"No thank you, Lariska. I want to go to university, so I have to keep studying."'
-				'"There isn''t anything wrong with studying, <<$pcs_nickname>>. But you have to go outside once in awhile too."'
-				'You tell her a bit about the last book you read, but you can see her eyes glazing over. "Ok, I need to head to class," you say, letting her off the hook.'
-				'Trying to hide her relief, she responds "Ok, see you later."'
+				'"There''s nothing wrong with studying, but you have to go outside once in a while too."'
+				'You tell her a bit about the last book you read, but you can see her eyes glazing over. "Okay, I need to head to class," you say, letting her off the hook.'
+				'"Okay," she responds. "See you later." She''s trying to hide her relief.'
 			elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20:
 				'"You don''t belong here, nerd. You better leave before I get Christina to kick your ass!"'
-				'"My, aren''t you friendly today Lariska."'
-				'"I''m not kidding, bitch. Get lost. Now"'
+				'"My, aren''t you friendly today?"'
+				'"I''m not kidding, bitch! Get lost. Now!"'
 				'Sighing, you leave before she can start a fight.'
 			else
 				'"Hey Lariska. Why can''t you trust atoms?"'
-				'Huh? What are you talking about, <<$pcs_nickname>>?'
+				'"Huh? What are you talking about, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 				'"They make up everything!"'
-				'"Right... I gotta go, Christina needs me." Standing up, she walks away before you can tell her any more jokes.'
+				'"Right... I gotta go. Christina needs me." Standing up, she walks away before you can tell her any more jokes.'
 			end
 		elseif grupTipe = 4:
 			if npc_rel['A13'] >= 50:
@@ -1317,61 +1290,61 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 				'"Hey, Lariska."'
 				'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You know Christina will throw a fit if she sees you talking to me."'
 				'"Fuck her. I''m not afraid."'
-				'Your attitude seems to embolden her a bit, as she stands a bit straighter and actually talks to you for awhile. Eventually break ends, and she waves bye at you, a secret little smile on her face just meant for you.'
+				'Your attitude seems to embolden her a bit, as she stands a bit straighter and actually talks to you for a while. Break eventually ends and she waves goodbye with a secret little smile on her face meant just for you.'
 			elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20:
 				'Lariska sees you in the hallway walking towards her and stands up, looking nervous.'
-				'"Hey, Lariska."'
-				'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Sorry, can''t chat. Christina needs me." She runs off, looking for her idol.'
-				+$OpenInnerThought+'Well that bitch was rude!'+$CloseInnerThought
+				'"Hey Lariska."'
+				'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. Sorry, can''t chat. Christina needs me." She then runs off, looking for her idol.'
+				+$OpenInnerThought+'Well that was rude, bitch!'+$CloseInnerThought
 			else
 				'Lariska sees you in the hallway walking towards her and stands up, looking nervous.'
-				'"Hey, Lariska."'
-				'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Sorry, I don''t think you''re supposed to be here." She looks around, like she is afraid and needs protection.'
+				'"Hey Lariska."'
+				'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. Sorry, I don''t think you''re supposed to be here." She looks around, like she''s afraid and needs protection.'
 				'"I just wanted to chat with you. I won''t bite... much."'
 				'Her face turns bright red and she starts shuffling her feet. "I''m sorry, I''ll get in trouble if Christina sees me talking to you." She gives you a pleading look.'
-				'"Ok, ok. I will just head to class then. See you around." She gives you a brief, shy smile before you walk away.'
+				'"Okay, okay. I''ll just head to class then. See you around." She gives you a brief, shy smile before you walk away.'
 			end
 		else
 			if npc_rel['A13'] >= 50:
 				'"I asked Christina if you could join our group. I was not prepared for the answer."'
-				'"Yeah, that bitch has hated me for as long as I can remember. Who knows why." Shrugging, you add "Whatever her issue is, it''s her problem."'
+				'You shrug. "Yeah, that bitch has hated me for as long as I can remember. Whatever her issue is, it''s her problem."'
 				'"I would be careful talking like that. If she hears you..."'
-				'Shrugging again, you say "I''m not afraid of her."'
-				'Changing the subject, the two of you gossip the rest of break.'
+				'You shrug again. "I''m not afraid of her."'
+				'Changing the subject, the two of you gossip for the rest of break.'
 			elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20:
-				'Teasingly, you ask "So where''s the old ball and chain?"'
-				'"Oh shut up <<$pcs_nickname>>. Don''t you have anything better to do? At least I have friends." Lariska fires back.'
-				'You start laughing. "Yeah, <i>friends</i>." Rolling your eyes at her, you walk off.'
+				'"So where''s the old ball and chain?" you ask teasingly.'
+				'"Oh shut up, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Don''t you have anything better to do? At least I have friends!" she fires back.'
+				'You start laughing. "Yeah, <i>friends</i>." Rolling your eyes at her, you walk away.'
 			else	
 				'"What are you doing here, <<$pcs_nickname>>? You don''t have friends here."'
-				'"Just because I''m not in your little social clubs doesn''t mean I don''t have friends."'
+				'"Just because I''m not in your little social club doesn''t mean I don''t have friends."'
 				'"That''s exactly what that means. If you actually tried to get along with people, maybe they would start accepting you."'
-				'Shrugging, you just give her a smile and walk off.'
+				'Shrugging, you just give her a smile and walk away.'
 			end
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'lariska_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'lariska_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'lariska_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_jock_chats', 'lariska_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -1382,7 +1355,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big13.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Lariska," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A13'] >= 70:
 			'She looks around before quickly digging through her backpack for a tampon and discreetly passes it to you. "Here."'
 		else
@@ -1397,9 +1370,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska_tampon':
 			'"I only have tampons," she says as she discreetly passes you one.'
 		end
 	end
-	'"Thanks Lariska."'
+	'"Thanks, Lariska."'
 	'"Just don''t tell Christina," she whispers. "I don''t want to leave you hanging but she''ll kill me if she finds out."'
-	'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+	'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 	isprok = 1
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 end
@@ -1423,11 +1396,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ivan':
 	gs 'exp_gain', 'chrsm', rand(1,2)
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big3.jpg"></center>'
-	!!this is story arc stuff I think it is coded correct but not sure.
 	if npc_rel['A3'] >= 80 and NikoPayback = 2 and IvanVsNiko = 0:act 'Ask for help with Niko': gt 'NikoPayback', 'Ivan Help'
 	if fame['pav_slut'] < 225 and IvanShowerQW = 1:
 		IvanShowerQW = 11
-		'Ivan thinks for a moment before he speaks. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I would like to talk to you about what happened in the shower. You''re a great girl, and I had a great time, but I''m not ready for a relationship. I need to put all my energy into my athletics. I think I have a good shot at getting to the Russian National Championships this year. I really can''t afford to be distracted by girls, even girls as attractive as you. So how about we just stick to fooling around a little?"'
+		'Ivan thinks for a second before he speaks. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I would like to talk to you about what happened in the shower. You''re a great girl, and I had a great time, but I''m not ready for a relationship. I need to put all my energy into my athletics. I think I have a good shot at getting to the Russian National Championships this year. I really can''t afford to be distracted by girls, even girls as attractive as you. So how about we just stick to fooling around a little?"'
 		act 'Discuss':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big3.jpg"></center>'
@@ -1436,7 +1408,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ivan':
 			'You laugh at his silly antics. It''s nice to have found a fun guy to hang out with. Perhaps you will stop by his place, or maybe even take him up on his offer to make lunch break less boring. "Sure Ivan, I''ll think about it."'
 
 			if npc_rel['A3'] >= 80 and NikoPayback = 2 and IvanVsNiko = 0:act 'Ask for help with Niko': gt 'NikoPayback', 'Ivan Help'
-
 			act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			act 'Tell him you''re bored right now':gt 'gdksport', 'Ivan_bored'
 		end
@@ -1452,8 +1423,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ivan':
 		else
 			act 'Tell Ivan you''re bored':gt 'gdksport', 'Ivan_bored'
 		end
-!! Since Ivan is only asking about the current day, not indefinitely, might be good to use a daystart
-!! variable here and in the scene in gdksport IvanShowerYes guards (IvanShowerDayStart or something)
+!! Since Ivan is only asking about the current day, not indefinitely, might be good to use a daystart variable here and in the scene in gdksport IvanShowerYes guards (IvanShowerDayStart or something)
 	elseif IvanShowerYes = 0 and IvanShowerQW = 11 and ShowerIvan < 3:
 		'As you''re about to head for your next class, Ivan suddenly stops you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, want to meet up with me in the showers after school?"'
 		act 'Decline':
@@ -1582,9 +1552,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ivan':
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
 		if npc_rel['A3'] >= 50:
-			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>." Ivan greets you as you walk towards him.'
+			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>," Ivan greets you as you walk towards him.'
 			'"What''s up, Prince of Boxers? Do you still have time to chat despite all the training and the crowds of cheerleaders?" you ask jokingly as you do shadowboxing next to him.'
-			'"I always have time for you." he replies as he winks at you. He starts to talk about everything that comes to his mind, but mostly about boxing, running, and the workouts he and Fedor have been doing together lately.'
+			'"I always have time for you," he replies as he winks at you. He starts to talk about everything that comes to his mind, but mostly about boxing, running, and the workouts he and Fedor have been doing together lately.'
 			'"You''ll end up joining us if you become such a pro at fighting. Think about it," you say with a wistful sigh before you start talking about how many adventures he could have with you and your fellow gopniks. "I''d challenge you to a fight sometime, though." you say, filled with self-confidence. "I bet I could kick your ass." you continue as you playfully smack him on the ass.'
 			*nl
 			'"You can always find me in the community center if you''d like to bet your ass," he says and you can see his eyes running down your ass.'
@@ -1610,7 +1580,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ivan':
 			'"The truth is, I was just about to..." he starts to say, and when he looks at you and sees that he has no chance of getting away, he continues. "...but anyway, we can talk."'
 			'He''s not in a great mood, and keeps looking in the direction of the others, as if expecting one of them to do something. He sighs and realizes he has no other choice than to share a thing or two about what''s been going on with him lately.'
 			*nl
-			'"Booooring." you say as you roll your eyes. "You should do more things, get some free time or you''ll miss the best time of your life." you add.'
+			'"Booooring!" you say as you roll your eyes. "You should do more things, get some free time or you''ll miss the best time of your life."'
 			'"You know, I don''t really have time for anything other than training and doing some important things at home." he says, then complains about how although he''d like to be a bit more social, he can''t afford to be distracted by anything.'
 			'"I was hoping you''d tell me something more interesting, though. I''m probably more bored now than I was before!" you say jokingly before standing up, dusting yourself off and walking away while waving at him.'
 		end

+ 10 - 10
locations/gschool_nerd_chats.qsrc

@@ -281,14 +281,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'julia':
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_nerd_chats', 'julia_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_nerd_chats', 'julia_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -300,7 +300,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'julia':
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_nerd_chats', 'julia_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -312,7 +312,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'julia_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big12.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Julia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A14'] > 40:
 			'"A tampon?" Julia blushes faintly as she reaches for her purse. "I don''t have tampons, but I have some spare pads. Is that okay?"'
 			if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
@@ -332,11 +332,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'julia_tampon':
 			isprokp = 1
 			act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		else
-			act'Uh...':
+			act 'Uh...':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"Uh..."'
 				*nl
-				'You hesitate as she holds out the pad for you, very conscious of the fact that you cannot use a menstrual pad right now unless you can somehow get ahold of some underwear to go with it. Julia misinterprets your hesitation and her cheeks color with embarrassment, assuming that you''re judging her for using pads.'
+				'You hesitate as she holds out the pad for you, very conscious of the fact that you can''t use a menstrual pad right now unless you can somehow get ahold of some underwear to go with it. Julia misinterprets your hesitation and her cheeks color with embarrassment, assuming that you''re judging her for using pads.'
 				*nl
 				'"That will be fine, thanks," you say with a false smile.'
 				'"You''re welcome," she mumbles, looking away as she hands you the pad.'
@@ -345,7 +345,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'julia_tampon':
 				act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			end
 			
-			act'That''s not going to work':
+			act 'That''s not going to work':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"Uhm... A pad''s not going to work for me," you say.'
 				'"Huh? Why not?" Julia looks confused.'
@@ -361,10 +361,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'julia_tampon':
 			'She quickly digs into her purse and comes up with a pad for you'
 			'"Thanks Julia."'
 			'"You''re welcome," she smiles back.'
-			'Then you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
+			'You run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		else
 			'Julia looks startled that you''re asking her but nods hesitantly.'
-			'"Y-yeah, I have one you can use..." She digs into her purse and comes up with a pad for you'
+			'"Y-yeah, I have one you can use..." She digs into her purse and comes up with a pad for you.'
 			'"Thanks Julia."'
 			'"You''re welcome," she mumbles and you run off to the bathroom to go put the tampon in before class starts.'
 		end

+ 17 - 21
locations/gschool_outcast_chats.qsrc

@@ -67,15 +67,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'petia':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big159.jpg"></center>'
 	if fame['pav_slut'] > 200:
 		if npc_rel['A159'] >= 50:
-			if soniaPS > 0:
-				'"Look everyone, the other school bike is here! We don''t have to share Sonia anymore!" The nerds awkwardly ignore him as he walks up to you with a wide grin. His filthy teeth look like they haven''t seen a toothbrush in years, if ever. "Are you here to finally give me a blowjob?" he asks with a creepy stare. Despite your reputation, even you still have standards and snort in disgust before walking away.' 
-				'Unfazed by your rejection, he walks up to Sonia and asks her the same question. You can see Sonia visibly gag and nearly throw up in her mouth in disgust.'
-			else
-				'"Look everyone, it''s the school bike!" The nerds awkwardly ignore him as he walks up to you with a wide grin. His filthy teeth look like they haven''t seen a toothbrush in years, if ever. "Are you here to finally give me a blowjob?" he asks with a creepy stare. Despite your reputation, even you still have standards and snort in disgust before walking away.'
-			end
+			'"Look everyone, the other school bike is here! We don''t have to share Sonia anymore!" The nerds awkwardly ignore him as he walks up to you with a wide grin. His filthy teeth look like they haven''t seen a toothbrush in years, if ever. "Are you here to finally give me a blowjob?" he asks with a creepy stare. Despite your reputation, even you still have standards and snort in disgust before walking away.' 
+			if soniaPS > 0: 'Unfazed by your rejection, he walks up to Sonia and asks her the same question. You can see her visibly gag in disgust.'
 		else
-			'He backs away when he sees you approaching. "Get away from me you disgusting slut!" He then stops, turns around and walks back. "Unless you want to give me a blowjob that is?" he asks hopefully, but even you have standards and snort in disgust before walking away. '
-			if soniaPS > 0: 'Unfazed by your rejection, he walks up to Sonia and asks her the same question. You can see Sonia visibly gag and nearly throw up in her mouth in disgust.'
+			'He backs away when he sees you approaching. "Get away from me you disgusting slut!" He then stops, turns around and walks back. "Unless you want to give me a blowjob that is?" he asks hopefully, but even you have standards and snort in disgust before walking away.'
+			if soniaPS > 0: 'Unfazed by your rejection, he walks up to Sonia and asks her the same question. You can see her visibly gag in disgust.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 1:
 		grupvalue[1] -= 1
@@ -85,7 +81,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'petia':
 		if npc_rel['A159'] >= 50:
 			'Petia grins as you approach. He invades your personal space without a care as a raunchy smell hits your nostrils. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re smoking hot, you know that? I might just let you date me if you ask nicely." He gives you a creepy smile that shows his filthy teeth, which look like they haven''t seen a toothbrush in years, if ever.'
 			*nl
-			'You snort in laughter. "<i>You</i>? Dating <i>me</i>?" You burst out into a fit of laughter. "Petia, I wouldn''t date you if my life depended on it. If we were the last people on Earth, I would rather jump off a cliff or be eaten alive by wild animals than have sex with you!"' 
+			'You snort in laughter. "<i>You</i>? Dating <i>me</i>?" You burst out into a fit of laughter. "Petia, I wouldn''t date you if my life depended on it. If we were the last people on Earth, I would rather jump off a cliff than have sex with you!"' 
 			if tits >= 5: 'You notice he isn''t paying attention and follow his gaze down to see that he''s staring at your breasts instead. "My eyes are up here, perv! Are you drooling? Eeeww! Go and cream your pants at your own tits, you fat loser!" you exclaim while covering your breasts with your arm. He quickly darts his eyes back up.'
 			'Disgusted, you back away, but sense his creepy gaze on the back of your head as you walk away.'
 		else
@@ -99,10 +95,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'petia':
 		grupvalue[3] -= 1
 		grupvalue[4] -= 1
 		if npc_rel['A159'] >= 50:
-			'Petia grins as you approach. He invades your personal space without a care as a raunchy smell hits your nostrils. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, did I mention that you have an amazing looking body and look so hot when you work out in gym class? You''re too good looking for those jocks and should hook up with me instead." He gives you a creepy smile that shows his filthy teeth, which look like they haven''t seen a toothbrush in years, if ever.'
+			'Petia grins as you approach. He invades your personal space without a care as a raunchy smell hits your nostrils. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, did I mention that you have an amazing looking body and look so hot when you work out in gym class? You''re too good looking for those jacked up monkeys and should hook up with me instead." He gives you a creepy smile that shows his filthy teeth, which look like they haven''t seen a toothbrush in years, if ever.'
 			*nl
-			'You snort in laughter. "<i>You</i>? Dating <i>me</i>?" You burst out into a fit of laughter. "Petia, I wouldn''t date you if my life depended on it. If we were the last people on Earth, I would rather jump off a cliff or be eaten alive by wild animals than have sex with you!"' 
-			if tits >= 5: 'You notice he isn''t paying attention and follow his gaze down to see that he''s staring at your breasts instead. "Do you drool at the sight of my tits in gym class as well, you dirty perv?" you ask sternly while covering your breasts with your arm. He quickly darts his eyes back up. '
+			'You snort in laughter. "<i>You</i>? Dating <i>me</i>?" You burst out into a fit of laughter. "Petia, I wouldn''t date you if my life depended on it. If we were the last people on Earth, I would rather jump off a cliff than have sex with you!"' 
+			if tits >= 5: 'You notice he isn''t paying attention and follow his gaze down to see that he''s staring at your breasts instead. "Those ''jacked up monkeys'' would beat your ass if they saw you drooling at my tits. Put your tongue back in your mouth, perv!" you sternly tell him while covering your breasts with your arm. He quickly darts his eyes back up.'
 			'Disgusted, you back away, but sense him staring at your ass as you walk away.'
 		else
 			'Petia looks fearful as you approach. "What do you want?" he snarls.' 
@@ -175,7 +171,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'petia':
 		else
 			'Petia looks a little fearful, yet somehow confident at the time. "What do you want, loser?" you snarl while trying not to inhale his foul aroma.'
 			'He gives you a creepy smile that shows his filthy teeth, which look like they haven''t seen a toothbrush in years, if ever. "I think you''re just acting tough because you''re scared of the truth. You want to date me. Why else would you be talking to me?"'
-			'"Date <i>you</i>?!" you exclaim while balling your fist up. "I would punch your teeth out right now if I wasn''t worried about catching some filthy disease off of you. It''s called ''soap'', you smelly cunt!" He quickly backs away, but you can feel his creepy gaze on the back of your head as you walk away. You turn around and glare at him, causing him to quickly look at the floor.'
+			'"Date <i>you</i>?!" you exclaim while balling your fist up. "I would punch your rotten teeth out right now if I wasn''t worried about catching some filthy disease off of you. It''s called ''soap'', you smelly cunt!" He quickly backs away, but you can feel his creepy gaze on the back of your head as you walk away. You turn around and glare at him, causing him to quickly look at the floor.'
 			if tits >= 5: '"And I seen you staring at my tits as well, perv! Do it again and I''ll kick your balls back up inside you!" you add.'
 		end
 	else
@@ -319,26 +315,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia':
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	if mesec > 0 and isprok = 0 and isprokp = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
-			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"'
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
+			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_outcast_chats', 'sonia_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_outcast_chats', 'sonia_tampon'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif placebopart > 0 and LutH > 0 and knowpreg = 0:
-		act'Ask for a tampon':
+		act 'Ask for a tampon':
 			$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"'
 			gs 'gschool_outcast_chats', 'sonia_tampon'
 		end
 		
 		if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
-			act'Ask for a pad':
-				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad, can I borrow one?"'
+			act 'Ask for a pad':
+				$temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a pad. Can I borrow one?"'
 				gs 'gschool_outcast_chats', 'sonia_tampon'
 			end
 		end
@@ -349,7 +345,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_tampon':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big139.jpg"></center>'
 	'<<$temp[''tampon_ask'']>>'
-	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon, can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
+	if $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period just started and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"' or $temp['tampon_ask'] = '"Sonia," you whisper. "My period is starting soon and I don''t have a tampon. Can I borrow one?"':
 		if npc_rel['A25'] >= 70:
 			'"Don''t worry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''ve got your back," she says, immediately digging into her purse to produce one.'
 			'"Thanks Sonia, you''re a lifesaver."'

+ 138 - 75
locations/pav_beach_chat.qsrc

@@ -50,10 +50,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'beach_hangout':
 		end
 		$table_beach += '</table>'
 		$table_beach
-		act'Go back':gt'pav_lake'
+		act 'Go back': gt 'pav_lake'
 	else
 		'It seems everyone has had their fill of hanging out at the beach today. You see several of them have already left and the rest are either walking away or are gathering up their stuff and saying their goodbyes to each another. You are soon the last person left.'
-		act'Go back':gt'pav_lake'
+		act 'Go back': gt 'pav_lake'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -161,7 +161,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lazar':
 			'"Looks like the loser is lost." someone comments as you approach.' 
 			'"Nah, I bet even Lesco and Petia can''t stand being around her and, honestly, who can blame them?" Lazar replies, which gets the group laughing so hard you know it''s pointless to even try and talk to him.'
 		else
-			'You approach and try to talk to him, but he flat out ignores you and pretends you''re not there. After several minutes of this, he finally sighs loudly. "Can''t you take a fucking hint? No one wants to talk to you!" He then returns to ignoring you and you walk away.'
+			'You approach and try to talk to him, but he straight up ignores you and pretends you''re not there. After several minutes of this, he finally sighs loudly. "Can''t you take a fucking hint? No one wants to talk to you!" He then returns to ignoring you and you walk away.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
@@ -195,9 +195,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'svyatoslav':
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
 		if npc_rel['A8'] >= 50:
-			'As you walk up to him he says. "You get lost nerd?"'
-			'You shake your head no. "No I just wanted to say hi."'
-			'He snorts. "What ever, hey make sure you don''t lean to far forward in class so I can copy off you." Then he mostly ignores you but doesn''t pick on you at least.'
+			'"You get lost, nerd?" he asks as you approach.'
+			'You shake your head. "No, I just wanted to say hi."'
+			'He snorts. "Whatever." He then ignores you, but doesn''t pick on you at least.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A8'] <= 20:
 			'"You get lost, nerd?" he asks as you approach.'
 			'You shake your head. "No, I just wanted to say hi."'
@@ -248,7 +248,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vanya':
 			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>! You need to help me hide!" Vanya is alarmingly looking around.'
 			'Feeling stressed, you ask. "What''s wrong?! Who''s after you?!"'
 			'Vanya cracks up seeing you panic. "Just kidding! I just wanted to see your reaction."'
-			'"Always the same thing Vanya. Don''t you get tired of playing games all the time?" you reprimand him.'
+			'"Always the same thing with you, Vanya. Don''t you get tired of playing games all the time?" you reprimand him.'
 		end
 	elseif npc_rel['A165'] <= 20:
 		'He just completely ignores you and spends his time talking to Vicky.'
@@ -267,16 +267,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'erast':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/erast/beach_chat.jpg"></center>'
 	if npc_rel['A150'] >= 50:
-		'"Here''s the resident big guy of our school!" you say jokingly when you approach Erast who is watching some of the girls in bikini''s.'
+		'"Here''s the resident big guy!" you say jokingly as you approach Erast, who''s watching some of the girls in their bikinis.'
 		'You can see him blushing a little when he looks up and notices you. "Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>, how''re you doing today?"'
 		'"I''m fine, thanks for asking. You know, I came here to get some pointers as I''ve been struggling with my training recently. I have to pay attention to my shape and some good tips are always useful."'
 		*nl
-		'"You already look good <<$pcs_nickname>>." he says politely but his face turns red a little. Before you could react, he starts talking about aerobic and anaerobic techniques which he thinks would help you with your goal.'
-		'You listen to him very carefully and try to remember as much as you can. Which is not easy, because he is so passionate talking about this topic that he often uses technical terms you don''t even know what they mean.'
+		'"You already look good, <<$pcs_nickname>>," he says politely, but his face turns a little red. Before you can react, he starts talking about aerobic and anaerobic techniques that he thinks would help you with your goal.'
+		'You listen to him very carefully and try to remember as much as you can. This isn''t easy, since he''s so passionate about this topic that he often uses technical terms that you don''t even remotely understand.'
 	elseif npc_rel['A150'] <= 20:
-		'"Hey Erast!" you greet him but he''s so focused on watching some of the other guys who are flexing and showing off their muscles, to see who has the biggest ones. When you try and talk to him more he excuses him self and walks over to show the guys what real big muscles look like.'
+		'"Hey Erast!" you greet him, but he''s focused on watching some of the other guys flexing and showing off their muscles. When you try and talk to him, he excuses himself and walks over to show the guys what real muscles look like.'
 	else
-		'You walk over and take a seat on the sand next to him, you start talking to him and he quickly engages in a conversation with you, the two of you talk for some time about a variety of topics.'
+		'You walk over and take a seat on the sand next to him. yYou start talking to him and he quickly engages in a conversation with you, the two of you talking for some time about a variety of topics.'
 	end
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 end
@@ -288,7 +288,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/christina/beach_chat.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk over to Christina as she lays on the beach getting a tan. Before you can even say a word, she speaks up. "I''m having a good day, so go away before you ruin it or I''ll ruin your day." You sigh before turning and walking away. It seems she''ll never forgive you.'
+	'You walk over to Christina as she lays on the beach sunbathing. Before you can even say a word, she speaks up. "I''m having a good day, so go away before you ruin it or I''ll ruin your day." You sigh before turning and walking away. It seems she''ll never forgive you.'
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 end
 
@@ -345,7 +345,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina':
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
 		'Albina is relaxing in the sun and working on her tan as you approach. She glares up at you when you block her light. "Oh god, it''s you. What the fuck do you want?"'
 		'"What''s your problem, bitch? I just want to talk," you scornfully reply.'
-		'Albina looks at you unimpressed. "My problem is that some knuckle brained moron is blocking my sunlight. Can you fuck off now?"'
+		'Albina looks at you unimpressed. "My problem is that some knuckle brained moron is blocking my sunlight! Can you fuck off now?"'
 		'"Fucking stuck up rich bitch..." you mutter as you walk away, but she doesn''t hear you.'
 	else
 		'Albina is relaxing in the sun and working on her tan as you approach. She glares up at you when you block her light before closing her eyes again.'
@@ -365,28 +365,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lina':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/lina/beach_chat.jpg"></center>'
 	if npc_rel['A19'] >= 50:
 		if grupTipe = 1 or grupTipe = 2:
-			'"I''ve finally been improving my lap times." Lina proudly tells you.'
-			'"Great news! I''m glad you''re improving." you encourage her.'
-			'Lina nods. "Yeah, the new workout plan that Christina made for me is really great. She''s really helped me out a lot." There she goes, worshipping Christina.'
+			'"I''ve finally been improving my lap times!" Lina proudly tells you.'
+			'"Great news! I''m glad you''re improving!" you encourage her.'
+			'Lina nods. "Yeah, the new workout plan that Christina made for me is really great. She''s really helped me out a lot."'
+			+$OpenInnerThought+'There she goes, worshipping Christina.'+$CloseInnerThought
 		else
-			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>! Did you watch the latest video someone took of the Starlets? Their movements were amazing! I wish I could join them, but I''m too clumsy..." Lina looks dejected.'
+			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>! Did you watch the latest video someone took of the Starlets? Their movements were amazing! I wish I could join them, but I''m too clumsy..." She looks a little dejected.'
 			'"Is that so?" you curiously ask.'
-			'With a nervous laughter Lina replies. "I should stop, you''re probably not interested in this anyway." Before you''re able to answer, you can hear Christina calling her over and Lina quickly runs over to her, leaving you alone.'
+			'"I should stop, you''re probably not interested in this anyway..." she replies with a nervous laugh. Before you''re able to answer, you can hear Christina calling her over and Lina quickly runs over to her, leaving you alone.'
 		end
 	elseif npc_rel['A19'] <= 20:
 		if grupTipe = 1 or grupTipe = 2:
 			'"I always hear that I''m bad at sports, but you''re even worse than me!" Lina spares no time to insult you.'
 			'"Where did this come from?" you ask.'
-			'Lina mockingly replies. "It''s just something me and the other girls were discussing and I just wanted you to know that."'
-			'"Come and face me then and I''ll show you who''s the worse athlete!" you fire back.'
+			'"It''s just something me and the other girls were discussing and I just wanted you to know that," she mockingly replies.'
+			'"Come and face me and I''ll show you who the worse athlete is!" you fire back.'
 		else
 			'"So where''s the old ball and chain?" you teasingly ask.'
-			'"Oh shut up <<$pcs_nickname>>. Don''t you have anything better to do? At least I have a friend unlike <i>some</i> people." Lina fires back.'
+			'"Oh shut up, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Don''t you have anything better to do? At least I have a friend unlike <i>some</i> people..." she fires back.'
 		end
 	else
-		'"What do you want <<$pcs_nickname>>? Christina is looking for me..." Lina says irritatingly.'
-		'"I wanted to ask you if you had the notes from the class. I need to copy it." you tell her.'
-		'"We''ll do it later. I have to find Christina right away or else she''ll get mad..." Lina excuses herself.'
+		'"What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>? Christina is looking for me..." Lina says irritatingly.'
+		'"I wanted to ask you if you had the notes from the class. I need to copy them," you tell her.'
+		'"We''ll do it later. I have to find Christina right away or else she''ll get mad." She quickly excuses herself.'
 	end
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 end
@@ -401,16 +402,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/lariska/beach_chat.jpg"></center>'
 	if npc_rel['A13'] >= 50:
 		'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! I need help with a thing and I think you''re the perfect person that can help me out." Lariska smiles.'
-		'"Sure thing Lariska. What do you need help with?" you curiously ask.'
-		'"Well... I need to impress Christina and need your help with coming up with something fitting..." she starts and goes on a long tirade about what might impress Christina.'
+		'"Sure thing! What do you need help with?" you curiously ask.'
+		'"Well... I need to impress Christina and need your help with coming up with something fitting," she starts and goes on a long tirade about what might impress Christina.'
 	elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20:
 		'"So where''s the old ball and chain?" you teasingly ask.'
-		'"Oh shut up <<$pcs_nickname>>. Don''t you have anything better to do? At least I have friends." Lariska fires back.'
+		'"Oh shut up <<$pcs_nickname>>. Don''t you have anything better to do? At least I have friends!" she fires back.'
 		'You start laughing. "Yeah, ''friends.''"'
 	else
-		'"What do you want <<$pcs_nickname>>? I don''t really have the time right now." Lariska says.'
+		'"What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>? I don''t really have the time right now," Lariska says.'
 		'"Well... I just wanted to talk..." you tell her.'
-		'She glances around, you guess checking to see if Christina is looking, then she talks with you for a bit, but then suddenly stops and gets up. You notice Christina looking your direction with a angery look on her face as Lariska heads towards her.'
+		'She glances around to see if Christina is looking, then talks with you for a few minutes before she suddenly stops and gets up. You notice Christina looking in your direction with an angry look on her face as Lariska heads towards her.'
 	end
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 end
@@ -425,13 +426,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fedor':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/fedor/beach_chat.jpg"></center>'
 	if npc_rel['A13'] >= 50:
 		'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>!" Fedor smiles at you.'
-		'You take a seat next to him on the sand and quickly find yourself in a deep conversation with him for awhile before things start to wind down and you tell him bye as you get up.'
+		'You take a seat next to him on the sand and quickly find yourself in a deep conversation with him for a while before things start to wind down and you bid him farewell as you get up.'
 	elseif npc_rel['A13'] <= 20:
-		'You sit down in the sand next to him and try to talk to him but he mostly just ignores you, then he finally gets up and just walks off leaving you sitting in the sand alone.'
+		'You sit down and try to talk to him, but he just ignores you until he finally gets up and walks away, leaving you sitting in the sand alone.'
 	else
-		'"What''s up <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Fedor says.'
-		'"I just wanted to talk." you tell him.'
-		'He smiles and engages you in a interesting conversation for awhile, eventually the conversation ends and you sit for a moment in silence before he gets up and tells you he will talk to you later, then he walks over to Ivan.'
+		'"What''s up, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" he asks.'
+		'"I just wanted to talk," you reply.'
+		'He smiles and engages you in an interesting conversation for a while. The conversation eventually ends and you sit in silence before he gets up and walks over to Ivan.'
 	end
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 end
@@ -445,22 +446,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ivan':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/ivan/beach_chat.jpg"></center>'
 	if npc_rel['A3'] >= 50:
-		'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>." Ivan greets you as he sees you approaching.'
-		'"Hello Ivan, what''s up? How was your last training match?" you ask curiously.'
-		'He tells you about it and after that the two of you talk about a variety of topics for awhile, until he finally gets up and says he is going to go for a swim. Then he runs out into the lake and dives forward once the water is deep enough.'
+		'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>," Ivan greets you as he sees you approaching.'
+		'"Hey Ivan. How was your last training match?" you ask curiously.'
+		'He tells you about it and after that the two of you talk about a variety of topics for a while until he gets up and says he''s going for a swim. He runs out into the lake and dives forward once the water is deep enough.'
 	elseif npc_rel['A3'] <= 20:
-		'You see Ivan talking to Fedor and decide to go to him. "Hi Ivan, do you have a minute?" you ask.'
-		'As he turns around, he notices it''s you talking to him. "Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. Is it important? As you can see, I''m talking to Fedor and we''re discussing an important thing." he says, then turns back to Fedor.'
+		'You see Ivan talking to Fedor and decide to approach him. "Hey Ivan, do you have a minute?" you ask.'
+		'He turns around. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>. Is it important? As you can see, I''m talking to Fedor and we''re discussing an important thing."'
 		'"Not that important, I just thought we could have a little chat. You''re always talking to Fedor anyway, you need a change, don''t you?" you ask in a playful, flirtatious tone.'
 		*nl
-		'He''s clearly not impressed by your desperate attempt. He turns back to you, looks you in the eye and says: "I told you I''m busy now, maybe some other time." and with that, he starts talking to Fedor again.'
-		'You feel very awkward as he wasn''t interested in your flirting at all. You stand there, you don''t know what to do. You decide not to push it any further, so you leave them there.'
+		'He''s clearly not impressed by your desperate attempt as he looks you in the eye. "I told you I''m busy right now. Maybe some other time." With that, he starts talking to Fedor again.'
+		'You feel very awkward as he wasn''t interested in your flirting at all. You decide not to push it any further and leave them alone.'
 	else
-		'As you walk over to him. "Hi Ivan, how are you today?" you ask.'
-		'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>, fine..." Ivan replies as he looks around. When he sees that everyone is busy with doing something or talking to someone, he sits down on the sand and gestures for you to sit down next to him.'
-		'You start chatting about everything from school to sports to reading. After a while, Ivan starts talking about how he tried to help his younger siblings learn. "It''s important that they get a good education. I want them to achieve something in life." she says with a serious look in her eyes.'
-		'"That''s very thoughtful of you. If you want, I can share some tips." you reply. In the next few minutes, you share a few tips on how he can help them as much as possible and how he could make learning enjoyable for them.'
-		'After a while, you stand up. "I''m going now, I want to revise my homework one more time before class." you say, and then head off to the classroom.'
+		'"Hey Ivan, how are you today?" you ask as you walk over to him.'
+		'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>. I''m fine..." Ivan replies as he looks around. When he sees that everyone is busy doing something or talking to someone, he sits down on the sand and gestures for you to sit next to him.'
+		'You start chatting about everything from school, to sports and reading. After a while, Ivan starts talking about how he tried to help his younger siblings learn. "It''s important that they get a good education. I want them to achieve something in life," he says with a serious look in his eyes.'
+		'"That''s very thoughtful of you. If you want, I can share some tips?" you reply. For the next few minutes, you share a few tips on how he can help them as much as possible and how he could make learning enjoyable for them.'
+		'After a while, you stand up. "I should get going."'
 	end
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 end
@@ -480,13 +481,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 			'"You seem to have the wrong idea about me <<$pcs_nickname>>." Dimka holds out his hand to keep you from getting any closer. "Just because we run in the same social circle doesn''t mean we''re friends."'
 			'You can''t help but scoff and roll your eyes. "Who said I want to be friends? You just looked lonely standing over here by yourself. I was just trying to be nice." You trade a few more barbs back and forth.'
 		else
-			'Dimka is willing to entertain you for a bit, occasionally taking part in the conversation but letting you do most of the talking. "Hey, Bella!" he calls as he spots her walking by. "Sorry, I hope you don''t mind." He follows after her before you can even reply. At least he let you talk to him.'
+			'Dimka is willing to entertain you for a few minutes, occasionally taking part in the conversation but letting you do most of the talking. "Hey, Bella!" he calls as he spots her walking by. "Sorry, I hope you don''t mind." He follows after her before you can even reply. At least he let you talk to him.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 2:
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 50:
-			'"Have I shown you my photos from my last trip?" he smiles. "Take a look at this." He pulls out his phone and shows you some photos from his latest trip to Moscow. "You would''ve loved it out there. It really made me realize we''re wasting away out here in a place like this." You then chat about the other places he has visited.'
+			'"Have I shown you my photos from my last trip?" he smiles. "Take a look at this." He pulls out his phone and shows you some photos from his latest trip to Moscow. "You would''ve loved it out there. It really made me realize we''re wasting away out here in a place like this." You then chat about the other places he''s visited.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
-			'Dimka looks down at you with a condescending smile. "What do you want?" he asks, maintaining his "friendly" appearance in front of everyone.'
+			'Dimka looks down at you with a condescending smile. "What do you want?" he asks, maintaining his ''friendly'' appearance in front of everyone.'
 			'"I just wanted to say hi is all," you reply.'
 			'He looks around like this is a common burden. "Of course you did, everyone does." You try talking to him, but he acts like he is barely tolerating you, like a Tsar might a peasant in his court.'
 		else
@@ -494,7 +495,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 60:
-			'Dimka greets you with a friendly smile, making room for you in the group made up of Bella, Igor and a few other students. Some of them give you an odd look, obviously not sure why you''re here, but Dimka makes you feel welcome. "Relax, she doesn''t have the plague," he playfully chides everyone and you are soon engaged in a conversation with Dimka.'
+			'Dimka greets you with a friendly smile, making room for you in the group made up of Bella, Igor and a few others. Some of them give you an odd look, obviously not sure why you''re here, but Dimka makes you feel welcome. "Relax, she doesn''t have the plague," he playfully chides everyone and you''re soon engaged in a conversation with Dimka.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
 			'Dimka looks down at you with a condescending smile. "You get lost loser? Shouldn''t you be off pretending to be an elf or something?" he asks with a charming smile on his face.'
 			'"I just wanted to say hi is all," you reply.'
@@ -506,7 +507,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 60:
-			'Dimka greets you with a friendly smile, making room for you in the group made up of Bella, Igor and a few other students. Some of them give you an odd look, obviously not sure why you''re here, but Dimka makes you feel welcome. "Relax, she doesn''t have the plague," he playfully chides everyone and you are soon engaged in a conversation with Dimka.'
+			'Dimka greets you with a friendly smile, making room for you in the group made up of Bella, Igor and a few others. Some of them give you an odd look, obviously not sure why you''re here, but Dimka makes you feel welcome. "Relax, she doesn''t have the plague," he playfully chides everyone and you''re soon engaged in a conversation with Dimka.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
 			'Dimka looks down at you with a condescending smile. "What do you want? We don''t have any drugs and none of us want whatever it is you''re selling," he remarks, maintaining his "friendly" appearance in front of everyone.'
 			'"I just wanted to say hi is all," you reply.'
@@ -603,7 +604,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A14'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A14'']>></font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big14.jpg"></center>'
-			'You approach Katja and thank her for taking you home from the disco when you were drunk and she gives you a knowing smile. "Don''t mention it <<$pcs_nickname>>! You really shouldn''t get that drunk again though. It could end badly. Some of the guys there are real pigs..." she says. "Do you want to hang out after school? We could do our homework together?"'
+			'You approach Katja and thank her for taking you home from the disco when you were drunk and she gives you a knowing smile. "Don''t mention it, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You really shouldn''t get that drunk again though. It could end badly. Some of the guys there are real pigs..." she says. "Do you want to hang out after school? We could do our homework together?"'
 			'"Sure, why not?" you reply.'
 			act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 		end
@@ -612,7 +613,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja':
 		if npc_rel['A14'] >= 50:
 			if katjaQW['know_katja_uni'] = 0 and SchoolAtestat = 1 and (month > 6 or (month = 6 and day > 15)):
 				!!Katja tells you that she has enrolled in the university.
-				gt 'KatjaHomeTalk',  'katja_uni_tell'
+				gt 'KatjaHomeTalk', 'katja_uni_tell'
 			end
 			'You spend some time lying next to Kat''s, laughing and joking as she tells you some personal stories about Vicky. "She had been drinking all night and had to go, but all the stalls were full, so she drags me out behind the community center to go pee behind a bush." She breaks out into a fit of giggles.'
 			'"She was so drunk, as she was squatting, she stumbled and fell into her own pee!"'
@@ -629,7 +630,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja':
 		if npc_rel['A14'] >= 50:
 			if katjaQW['know_katja_uni'] = 0 and SchoolAtestat = 1 and (month > 6 or (month = 6 and day > 15)):
 				!!Katja tells you that she has enrolled in the university.
-				gt 'KatjaHomeTalk',  'katja_uni_tell'
+				gt 'KatjaHomeTalk', 'katja_uni_tell'
 			end
 			'Lying next to Katja you have a lively conversation where you exchange funny stories about Vanya. "And that''s how my sister fell in love with the biggest clown in school!" she laughs with a snort.'
 			'"And I wouldn''t change him for the world!" Vicky adds with a smile.'
@@ -658,13 +659,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja':
 		elseif npc_rel['A14'] <= 20:
 			'Katja doesn''t look too happy to see you and your conversation doesn''t really go anywhere as she keeps her answers short or doesn''t say anything at all. At least she''s willing to actually talk to you.'
 		else
-			'Altough Katja is happy to see you, she doesn''t do much talking. You get the feeling that she''d open up more if you were closer, but for now you''ll have to settle with this.'
+			'Although Katja is happy to see you, she doesn''t do much talking. You get the feeling that she''d open up more if you were closer, but for now you''ll have to settle with this.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A14'] >= 50:
 			if katjaQW['know_katja_uni'] = 0 and SchoolAtestat = 1 and (month > 6 or (month = 6 and day > 15)):
 				!!Katja tells you that she has enrolled in the university.
-				gt 'KatjaHomeTalk',  'katja_uni_tell'
+				gt 'KatjaHomeTalk', 'katja_uni_tell'
 			end
 			'Katja takes a surprising interest in what you and your fellow gopniks get up to outside of school and listens carefully when you answer her numerous questions.'
 			if university['student'] = 1 and katjaQW['know_going_to_teaching_degree'] = 0 and $university['enrolled_in'] = 'teaching_studies':
@@ -1005,23 +1006,85 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'inna':
 	gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A17', 'like'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/irina/beach_chat.jpg"></center>'
-	if npc_rel['A17'] >= 50:
-		if grupTipe = 1 or grupTipe = 2:
-			'When Irina sees you, she smiles and waves. "Glad you showed up, was just discussing which boy is cutest." she tells you, it seems her and Bella can''t agree on which of the boys are the cutest, you join in with their ranking of the boys. The conversation is rather fun.'
+	if fame['pav_slut'] > 200:
+		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 90:
+			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, what did the virgin say after her first blowjob?" Irina asks, taking a sip of water as you respond.'
+			'"I don''t know, what did she say?"'
+			'"<i>Ah lurb yuuhh~!</i>" she replies without swallowing, grinning at you as it spills down her chin.' 
+		elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
+			'"I would rather have Petia stare at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, slut!" Irina hisses with disgust. "Keep your legs together, cunt! You''re a fucking embarrassment, you know that?" Irina taunts you before she spits in front of your legs. "Use this as lube to go and fuck yourself!"'
+			'You let her finish her rant before placing your hand into your swimsuit and letting your fingers slide over your clit. "When there''s an itch, you''ve got to scratch it!" Irina stands silently, shocked at your actions.'
 		else
-			'It''s easy to please Irina since she likes to talk about herself. So long as you ask her about herself and don''t interrupt her, she''s more than happy to talk with you.'
+			'"I would rather have Petia stare at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, slut!" Irina hisses with disgust.'
 		end
-	elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
-		if grupTipe = 1 or grupTipe = 2:
-			'Irina listens to you talking with a tired and bored expression. "Oh god, I think I''d rather talk to Lesco..." she yawns before brushing you off. "I''ve heard enough. Go bother Stasya."'
+	elseif grupTipe = 1:
+		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 60:
+			'"God, have you ever seen that Natasha girl? She''s so pathetic, right? She''s so obsessed with us!" Irina says before rolling her eyes and the two of you chat for a while about a variety of topics.'
+		elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
+			'"My advice is to sleep with as many people as possible," Irina says.' 
+			'"But that would make me a slut, wouldn''t it?" you reply.'
+			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, everybody does it. It''s just that nobody talks about it," she assures you.'
+			'"So, it''s like a secret society?"'
+			'"That''s one way of looking at it..." she nods in an approving manner, then gives you a friendly smile before walking away.'
 		else
-			'You try to make small talk with Irina, and to your surprise, she doesn''t instantly turn you away. Seeing as though she hasn''t said anything yet, you keep talking to her, even if she hasn''t said much... of anything yet. Falling quiet, you hear the faint sound of music and realize she''s being wearing earpods this whole time.'
+			'"Liza told me that some girl overheard this group of girls talking at lunch. Apparently, they heard Stasya talking shit about me!" Irina exclaims and both of you let out a little gasp, even though it really isn''t much of a surprise.'
+			'"What did she say?" you ask.'
+			'"Oh I wouldn''t dare repeat the things she said. It would just leave a bad taste in my mouth." Irina shakes her head in disappointment, but you notice the hint of a smirk on her lips. "Jealousy is such an ugly look..." The two of you continue gossiping for a while.'
+		end
+	elseif grupTipe = 2:
+		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 70:
+			'"Back when we were kids, Bella tried to ride a cow," Irina giggles.'
+			'"What, like a real life cow? How''d that go?" you ask curiously.'
+			'"She managed for few minutes before the cow shook her off and she landed in cowshit!" she cackles. "But you didn''t hear it from me, okay?"'
+			'You tap your nose, assuring Irina her secret is safe is safe with you.'
+			'"What are you girls laughing at?" Bella shouts from a distance.' 
+			'"Nothing, nothing..." you both reply in a near synchronized manner, though you both keep giggling for some time as Bella rolls her eyes and sighs deeply. "Effing kindergarten, seriously."' 
+		elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
+			'Irina listens to you talk with a tired and bored expression. "Oh god, I think I''d rather talk to Lesco..." she yawns before brushing you off.'
+		else		
+			'You try to make small talk with Irina, and to your surprise, she doesn''t instantly turn you away. Seeing as though she hasn''t said anything yet, you keep talking to her, even though she hasn''t said much of anything yet. Falling quiet, you hear the faint sound of music and realize she''s being wearing earpods the whole time.'
 			'With comical timing, Irina pulls them out when she finally notices you standing next to her. "What do you want?" she sneers.'
 		end
+	elseif grupTipe = 3:
+		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 80:
+			'"I need to get my nails done, but I won''t have time with all this stupid homework!" Irina whines with a pout.'
+			'"I''m sure Feofan or Petka would be more than happy to help you out," you gently remind her.'
+			'A sly smile spreads across Irina''s face. "You''re totally right <<$pcs_nickname>>! You know me so well."'
+		elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
+			'Irina listens to you talk with a tired and bored expression. "Oh god, I think I''d rather talk to Lesco..." she yawns before brushing you off.'
+		else
+			'"That Ben Solo is <i>so</i> hot. I would let him do anything he wants with me... You think he''s single?" Irina asks out loud.' 
+			'"I''m more into Luke myself..." you reply while keeping your cool.'
+			'"Who? You mean the old man who trained Rey?" she asks in surprise while mimicking a cock getting soft with her finger.'
+			'"He was young and cute in the originals! You know, A New Hope, Empire Strikes Back?" you explain.'
+			'"I don''t watch old movies. They''re... old," she shrugs.'  
+		end
+	elseif grupTipe = 4:
+		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 80:
+			'"You know that, I think it was in 9th grade, we girls had Lavrenti over because we wanted to borrow his camera for new shots for our social media and when he arrived, Bella suggested we kill the lights and see which one of us would dare get naked in front of him as a thank you. Of course, we were joking, so when the light were switched back on none of us were naked, but he had the biggest boner I''d ever seen!" she giggles.'
+			'"Wow, you girls really surprise me sometimes..." you reply with a hint of disappointment, hoping for something more juicy.' 
+			'"I know, right?!" She giggles while mimicking the size of Lavrenti''s cock with her hands like a fisherman describing his catch.' 
+		elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
+			'"Oh, it''s you. The lowlife. I thought you would''ve been in jail by now, but here you are! That must really be an accomplishment for you, right?" Irina says mockingly.'
+			'"Keep running your mouth like that and I''m gonna use that tongue of yours to clean my asshole!"'
+			'"I was wondering where that horrible smell was coming from!" she says and continues to ridicule you.'
+			'"Fuck you bitch, you''re getting it now!" You storm towards her but a group of the jocks block you. "Stop causing a scene and get out of here, <<$pcs_nickname>>!" Lazar says sternly.'  
+		else
+			'"Psst, you know where to get some, you know... green?" Irina whispers at you.'
+			'"What, you think just because I''m a gopnik I know every fucking drug dealer in town? Is that what you''re saying?!" you angrily reply.'
+			'"God no, of course not!" she says trying to explain herself.' 
+			'"There''s a guy in front of the Five-Eight in the evening. Your pretty face and those nice lips might get you a discount, if you know what I mean..." you laugh.'
+			'"Eeeww, gross! What''s wrong with you?! Thanks anyway, <<$pcs_nickname>>." As you''re parting ways, you give her an air gesture of a blowjob while holding an imaginary bag of weed in the other hand.'
+		end
 	else
-		'She looks you over from head to toe before she scoffs. "What?"'
-		'You smile at her. "I just wanted to talk."'
-		'She rolls her eyes and starts talking to Bella and Stasya. They mostly ignore you, but do respond to a few of your questions and comments as they talk about boys and fashion.'
+		if npc_rel['A17'] >= 90:
+			'It''s easy to please Irina since she likes to talk about herself. So long as you ask her about herself and don''t interrupt her, she''s more than happy to talk with you.'
+		elseif npc_rel['A17'] <= 20:
+			'"Hey Irina, about the next class.." you try to inquire.'	
+			'"God, I can''t have even five minutes to myself without some loser trying to talk to me!" she mumbles in an angry tone as she walks away.'
+		else	
+			'"You don’t have any friends, do you?" Irina asks with a stern, unimpressed look. "And you won''t ever find any either." She then turns around and ignores you.'
+		end
 	end
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 end
@@ -1042,29 +1105,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia':
 		else
 			'"What are you up to?" you ask as you watch her laying back getting a tan.'
 			'"Just trying to get a tan so I am not so white." Sonia sighs as she looks over at you.'
-			'You can''t help but laugh and tease her a little. In the end, the two of you end up talking about how to get the best tan and how much guys like tan girls.'
+			'You can''t help but laugh and tease her a little. In the end, the two of you end up talking about how to get the best tan and how much guys like tanned girls.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
 		if npc_rel['A139'] >= 50:
 			'"Hey Sonia!" you greet her with a smile and she gives you a friendly little wave.'
-			'"What''s up neeeeerd?" she asks with a giggle and you tell her you just wanted to hang out for a bit. With Sonia being so friendly, you slip into an easygoing banter with her for the rest of break.'
+			'"What''s up neeeeerd?" she asks with a giggle and you tell her you just wanted to hang out. With Sonia being so friendly, you slip into an easygoing banter with her for a while.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A139'] <= 20:
 			'You spend some time talking with Sonia, but she ends up focusing more on getting a tan and rarely responds to you, which is a bit disappointing, but at least she stuck around.'
 		else
 			'"Hey Sonia!" you greet her with a smile and gives you a friendly little wave.'
-			'"What''s up <<$pcs_nickname>>?" she asks and you tell her you just wanted to hang out for a bit. "Sure, I''ve got some time."'
-			'With Sonia being so friendly, you slip into an easygoing banter with her for the rest of break.'
+			'"What''s up, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" she asks and you tell her you just wanted to hang out. "Sure, I''ve got some time."'
+			'With Sonia being so friendly, you slip into an easygoing banter with her.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A139'] >= 50:
 			'"Hey Sonia!" you greet her with a smile and she gives you a friendly little wave.'
-			'"What''s up? Mind if I ask you some questions?" she asks and you shrug. She launches into a barrage of questions about partying with your fellow gopniks. What they''re like, what it''s like to run wild, etc. She seems very interested in what you and the other gopniks do for fun and you talk for a while, mostly sharing some of your favorite stories.'
+			'"What''s up? Mind if I ask you some questions?" she asks and you shrug, causing her to launch into a barrage of questions about partying with your fellow gopniks. She seems very interested in what you and the other gopniks do for fun and you end up talking for a while, mostly sharing some of your favorite stories.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A139'] <= 20:
 			'You spend some time talking with Sonia, but she ends up focusing more on getting a tan and rarely responds to you, which is a bit disappointing, but at least she stuck around.'
 		else
 			'"Hey Sonia!" you greet her with a smile and she gives you a friendly little wave.'
-			'"What''s up <<$pcs_nickname>>?" she asks and you tell her you just wanted to hang out for a bit. "Sure, I''ve got some time."'
-			'With Sonia being so friendly, you slip into an easygoing banter with her for awhile.'
+			'"What''s up, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" she asks and you tell her you just wanted to hang out for a bit. "Sure, I''ve got some time."'
+			'With Sonia being so friendly, you slip into an easygoing banter with her for a while.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'

+ 39 - 40
locations/pav_lake.qsrc

@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/lake.winter.night.jpg"></center>'
 		end
-		'<center>A small lake, located not far from Pavlovsk. You''re not sure whether Pavlovsk was built near the lake on purpose or not. The lake has been frozen over ever since winter arrived and it''s currently being used as a skating rink.</center>'
+		'<center>A small lake, located not far from Pavlovsk. You''re not sure whether Pavlovsk was built near the lake on purpose or not. The lake froze over when winter arrived and it''s currently being used as a skating rink.</center>'
 		*nl
 		if pcs_icesktng>0: 'Your ice skating skill is <<pcs_icesktng>>.'
 	end
@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 	if konki_cloth = 1 or pcs_ski_worn = 0:
 		if mid($start_type,1,2) = 'sg' and temper >= 20 and sunWeather = 1 and month >= 5 and month <= 9 and hour >= 12 and hour <= 14 and ((kanikuli = 0 and week = 7) or (kanikuli > 0 and week mod 2 = 0)):
 			if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
-				'As you walk down to the beach area of the lake, you see the jocks and cool kids hanging out and hope none of them have seen you naked. You should put on a bikini before approaching them if you want to hang out, or just avoid them and do your own thing today.'
+				'As you walk down to the beach area of the lake, you see the jocks and cool kids hanging out and hope none of them have seen you naked. You should put on a swimsuit before approaching them if you want to hang out, or just avoid them and do your own thing today.'
 			else
 				'As you walk down to the beach area of the lake, you see the jocks and cool kids hanging out.'
 				act 'Approach them': gt 'pav_lake', 'school_mates'
@@ -79,23 +79,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 		gs 'camera', 'check_location'
 	end
 
-	act'Return to Pavlovsk':
+	act 'Return to Pavlovsk':
 		*clr & cla
 		if konki_cloth = 1:
 			'You need to remove your skates first.'
-			act'Go back':gt'pav_lake'
+			act 'Go back':gt 'pav_lake'
 		elseif pcs_ski_worn = 1:
 			'You need to remove your skis first.'
-			act'Return':gt'pav_lake'
+			act 'Return':gt 'pav_lake'
 		elseif PCloswimwear = 1:
 			'You need to get dressed into your regular clothing first.'
-			act'Return':gt'pav_lake'
+			act 'Return':gt 'pav_lake'
 		elseif $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
 			minut += 5
-			gt'pav_residential'
+			gt 'pav_residential'
 		else
 			'You need to put some clothes on first.'
-			act'Return':gt'pav_lake'
+			act'Return':gt 'pav_lake'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -165,7 +165,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 			end
 
 			'You walk along the beach, enjoying the feeling of the sun on your body.'
-			act 'Continue':gt'pav_lake'
+			act 'Continue':gt 'pav_lake'
 		end
 		
 		if PCloswimwear = 1 or $clothingworntype = 'nude':
@@ -180,12 +180,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 	end
 
 	if konki_cloth = 0 and pcs_ski_worn = 0:
-		act'Go to the secluded beach':minut += 10 & gt'pav_lake_nude'
+		act 'Go to the secluded beach':minut += 10 & gt 'pav_lake_nude'
 	end
 
 	if month = 12 or month < 3:
 		if pcs_ski_worn = 1:
-			act'Take off your skis':
+			act 'Take off your skis':
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				minut += 5
@@ -193,11 +193,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skiing_3.jpg"></center>'
 				'You can''t believe your time skiing is already over. It feels like you just put on your ski boots and started around the lake. But now, as you sit down on the bench to take them off, your legs are tired and sore from a day of skiing. You unlace your boots and wiggle your toes, relieved to finally be able to stretch them out. You stand up and take a few steps, savouring the feeling of being barefoot after a day in stiff ski boots before you put your regular shoes back on.'
-				act'Continue':gt'pav_lake'
+				act 'Continue': gt 'pav_lake'
 			end
-			act'Ski around the lake (30 mins)': gt 'pav_lake', 'ski'
+			act 'Ski around the lake (30 mins)': gt 'pav_lake', 'ski'
 		elseif pcs_ski_owned > 0 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 17 and konki_cloth = 0:
-			act'Put your skis on':
+			act 'Put your skis on':
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				minut += 5
@@ -205,11 +205,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/skiing_1.jpg"></center>'
 				'You pull your ski boots out of your bag and sit down on the bench near the lake. The cold air nips at your cheeks as you begin to lace up your boots. You wiggle your toes, trying to get them as far back in the boots as possible. They feel a bit tight, but you know they''ll stretch out as you ski. You stand up and take a few steps, getting a feel for the boots.'
-				act 'Continue': gt'pav_lake'
+				act 'Continue': gt 'pav_lake'
 			end
 		end
 		if konki_cloth = 1:
-			act'Take off your skates':
+			act 'Take off your skates':
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				minut += 5
@@ -217,11 +217,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/konki0,1.jpg"></center>'
 				'You take off your skates and put your shoes back on. It takes you a while to adjust to walking on your feet again.'
-				act'Continue':gt'pav_lake'
+				act 'Continue': gt 'pav_lake'
 			end
 			act'Skate on the ice rink': gt 'pav_lake', 'skating_start'
 		elseif konki > 0 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 17 and pcs_ski_worn = 0:
-			act'Put your skates on':
+			act 'Put your skates on':
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				minut += 5
@@ -229,7 +229,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/konki0,0.jpg"></center>'
 				'You take your shoes off and put your skates on.'
-				act 'Continue': gt'pav_lake'
+				act 'Continue': gt 'pav_lake'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -246,13 +246,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lost_clothing':
 			pcs_mood -= 5
 			inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/event/noclothes.jpg"></center>'
-			'You return to the place where put your clothes to get dressed... except you can''t find them. You desperately search the beach for a while, a few passers-by giving you amused stares. Despite your efforts, you can''t find them. You panic and, without thinking, start running home naked.'
+			'You return to the place where put your clothes to get dressed... except you can''t find them. You desperately search the beach as a few passers-by give you amused stares. Despite your efforts, you can''t find them. You panic and, without thinking, start running home naked.'
 			act 'Run home naked': gt 'pav_lake', 'nude_home'
 		elseif nudelake = 4 and  func('homes_properties', 'has_access', 'parents_home'):
 			minut += 5
 			pcs_mood -= 5
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/event/nakedcar.jpg"></center>'
-			'You return to the place where you put your clothes to get dressed... except you can''t find them. You desperately search the beach for a while, a few passers-by giving you amused stares. A man eventually approaches you, his eyes are darting over your body as he speaks. "Is there a problem, sweetheart? You seem upset..."'
+			'You return to the place where you put your clothes to get dressed... except you can''t find them. You desperately search the beach as a few passers-by give you amused stares. A man eventually approaches you, his eyes darting over your body as he speaks. "Is there a problem, sweetheart? You seem upset..."'
 			if bag = 1:
 				'Luckily, your bag is sitting where you left it.'
 			else
@@ -270,7 +270,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lost_clothing':
 					danilovich_outfits_h[1] = 100
 					gs 'clothing', 'wear', 'danilovich_outfits', 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/event/nakedcar.jpg"></center>'
-					'There''s the catch. He looks at your naked body as you mull over his proposition. You realize that you don''t really have any other choice. You silently nod and give him the money, quickly putting the clothes on when he hands them over. You feel relieved that you won''t have to go home naked and hope that your clothes turn up later.'
+					'There''s the catch. He looks at your naked body as you mull over his proposition. You realize that you don''t really have any other choice, so you silently nod and give him the money before quickly putting the clothes on when he hands them over. You feel relieved that you won''t have to go home naked and hope that your clothes turn up later.'
 					act'Continue':gt'pav_lake'
 				end
 			else
@@ -278,7 +278,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lost_clothing':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/event/nakedcar.jpg"></center>'
 					'There''s the catch. He looks over your naked body as you mull over your predicament. "I don''t have that kind of money. Do you have a towel or something?"'
-					'He shakes his head and you can see a slight bulge forming in his pants. "No sorry, but I might be willing to trade the clothes..." He trails off suggestively and with the way he''s looking at you, you have no doubt what he has in mind.'
+					'He shakes his head and you can see a slight bulge forming in his pants. "No, but I might be willing to trade the clothes..." He trails off suggestively and with the way he''s looking at you, you have no doubt as to what he has in mind.'
 					'"What did you have in mind?" you ask rhetorically and he grins.'
 					'"Well, how about we get in my car and you let me fuck you? Then you can have the clothes."'
 					gs 'willpower', 'prostitution', 'resist'
@@ -290,7 +290,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lost_clothing':
 					else
 						act 'Refuse and run home naked (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 					end
-					act 'Agree to have sex': gt 'pav_lake', 'car_sex'
+					act 'Agree': gt 'pav_lake', 'car_sex'
 				end
 			end
 			gs 'willpower', 'prostitution', 'self'
@@ -299,7 +299,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lost_clothing':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/event/nakedcar.jpg"></center>'
-					'This is not how you planned for your day to go! Too afraid to look him in the eye, you feebly make a suggestion. "Is there... is there some other way I can pay you? 3000 <b>₽</b> is a lot of money."'
+					'This is not how you planned for your day to go! Too afraid to look him in the eye, you feebly make a suggestion. "Is there... is there some other way I can pay you? 3000 <b>₽</b> is a lot of money..."'
 					'He''s been gawking at your naked body the whole time you''ve been talking, and your suggestion seems to be exactly what he wanted to hear as he starts grinning. "I can think of one way..."'
 					'The growing bulge in his pants does an excellent job of telling exactly what he''s thinking.'
 					act 'Agree to have sex': gt 'pav_lake', 'car_sex'
@@ -324,7 +324,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lost_clothing':
 			gs 'clothing', 'wear', $lastwornclothingtype['swim'], lastwornclothingnumber['swim']
 			gs 'panties', 'wear', $lastwornpantytype['swim'], lastwornpantynumber['swim']
 			gs 'bras', 'wear', $lastwornbratype['swim'], lastwornbranumber['swim']
-			'You return to the place where you left your clothes, and put them back on.'
+			'You return to the place where you left your clothes and put them back on.'
 			act'Continue':gt'pav_lake'
 		end
 	end
@@ -383,9 +383,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sunbathe':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/fedor/fedorev/Strela/vadimbely.jpg"></center>'
-				'While sunbathing, you can''t help but notice a man walking towards you. He looks truly intimidating, his entire body covered in criminal gang tattoos. A bit further down the beach you see a younger man with similar tattoos, keeping an eye on the man approaching you.'
+				'While sunbathing, you can''t help but notice a man walking towards you. He looks truly intimidating, his entire body covered in criminal gang tattoos. A bit further down the beach, you see a younger man with similar tattoos keeping an eye on the man approaching you.'
 				'His head is mostly bald, and a large golden cross dangles on a thick chain from his neck. He sits his fat body down next to you before you can protest, idly scratching his belly as he begins to chat. "Hello! I''m not interrupting anything, am I?"'
-				act'Annoyed':
+				act 'Annoyed':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 5
 					gs'stat'
@@ -393,7 +393,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sunbathe':
 					'"Erm, excuse me!? I was here first!" you exclaim in an annoyed tone.'
 					'The man is not impressed in the slightest, obviously having played this game before, and immediately challenges your claim. "Oh, excuse me princess! Is this your spot? Do you own it?"'
 
-					act'Yes':
+					act 'Yes':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 5
 						gs'stat'
@@ -409,14 +409,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sunbathe':
 					end
 				end
 
-				act'Ignore them':
+				act 'Ignore them':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut+=5
 					gs'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/fedor/fedorev/Strela/vadimbely.jpg"></center>'
-					'Feeling intimidated and not wanting any trouble, you ignore them and pretend they''re not there, lying on the beach with your eyes closed. However, you feel a strange tickling your stomach few seconds later and open your eyes. You see the fat man running a blade of grass over your stomach with a smug grin on his face.'
+					'Feeling intimidated and not wanting any trouble, you ignore them and pretend they''re not there, lying on the beach with your eyes closed. However, you feel a strange tickling sensation on your stomach few seconds later and open your eyes. You see the fat man running a blade of grass over your stomach with a smug grin on his face.'
 
-					act'Keep ignoring them':
+					act 'Keep ignoring them':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut+=5
 						gs'stat'
@@ -432,7 +432,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sunbathe':
 			else
 				*clr & cla
 				'Three men sit down near you as you sunbathe. While you notice them looking at you and talking about your body, they don''t come over.'
-				act'Stop sunbathing':gt'pav_lake'
+				act 'Stop sunbathing':gt'pav_lake'
 			end
 		elseif tipelakeboyrand <= 60:
 			!! {below is for when this event is fixed. Generates a boy[0], boy[1], and boy[2]}
@@ -447,7 +447,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sunbathe':
 			!! gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated, 2
 			'Three men sit down near you as you sunbathe. While you notice them looking at you and talking about you, they don''t come over.'
 
-			act 'Continue':gt'pav_lake'
+			act 'Continue': gt'pav_lake'
 			exit
 		elseif tipelakeboyrand <= 80:
 			i = age - 5
@@ -459,16 +459,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sunbathe':
 			'A rather cute looking guy sits down next to you as you sunbathe.'
 			'"Hey there beautiful, I''m <<$boydesc>>. What''s your name?" he asks in an attempt to chat you up.'
 
-			act 'Get away from him':gt'pav_lake'
+			act 'Move away from him': gt 'pav_lake'
 			dynamic $gL_boy_z
 			exit
 		else
 			'Three men sit down near you as you sunbathe. While you notice them looking at you and talking about your body, they don''t come over.'
-			act 'Stop sunbathing':gt'pav_lake'
+			act 'Stop sunbathing': gt 'pav_lake'
 			exit
 		end
 	else
-		act'Stop sunbathing':gt'pav_lake'
+		act 'Stop sunbathing': gt 'pav_lake'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -519,8 +519,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car_sex':
 	danilovich_outfits_h[1] = 100
 	gs 'clothing', 'wear', 'danilovich_outfits', 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/car/sexcar1.jpg"></center>'
-	'He wastes no time and immediately throws you down on the back seat of his car when you agree. He pulls down his pants and, after putting a condom on, quickly guides his cock to your pussy. He obviously doesn''t plan on spending a lot of time with you and sinks it inside you in one firm thrust before he starts fucking you with rapid, short thrusts. He quickly shoots his load in the condom, ties a knot in it and throws it away. He hands you the clothes as promised, kicks you out of the car and drives off.'
-	*nl
+	'He wastes no time and immediately throws you down on the back seat of his car when you agree. He pulls down his pants and, after putting a condom on, quickly guides his cock to your pussy. He obviously doesn''t plan on spending a lot of time with you and sinks it inside you in one firm thrust before he starts fucking you with rapid, short thrusts. He quickly shoots his load in the condom, ties a knot in it and throws it away before he hands you the clothes as promised, kicks you out of the car and drives off.'
 	'It wasn''t the best sex you''ve had, but at least you have some clothes to wear now. With a sigh of relief, you straighten the clothes and feel ready to take the day on again, hoping your own clothes will turn up at some point.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -645,7 +644,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'school_mates':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/beach_hangout/school_mates.jpg"></center>'
 	if fame['pav_slut'] >= 225:
 		'You start approaching them, but are immediately greeted with disgusted stares and rude comments before Dimka walks over with Svyatoslav. "Get lost slut! We don''t want you here." You sigh before turning and walking away.'
-		act 'Leave': gt'pav_lake'
+		act 'Leave': gt 'pav_lake'
 	elseif grupTipe = 1 or grupTipe = 2:
 		'You start approaching them and are greeted with friendly smiles as several wave at you to come over and join them.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'pav_lake'

+ 113 - 140
locations/street_walker.qsrc

@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'work':
 		prst_loc = 2
 	end
 	gs 'street_walker', 'start'
-	'You do a last minute check of your outfit and makeup in a reflection in the window of a store. Yep, you look good and like you are open for business. With a final look, you turn and make your way down the sidewalk looking for a customer.'
+	'You check your reflection in a store window, doing a last minute check of your outfit and makeup before making your way down the sidewalk looking for a customer.'
 	act 'Work the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 	act 'Leave (don''t work)': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 end
@@ -99,7 +99,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event1':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if hour > 5 and hour < 20:
 		gs 'street_walker', 'start'
-		'It''s past 05:00, and much too late to find any work now. Maybe try again tonight. There should be demand from 20:00.'
+		'It''s past 05:00, and too late to find any work now. You can try again from 20:00.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 	else
 		inhib_exp += rand(3,6)
@@ -130,7 +130,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event1':
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/working' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 			end
-			'You walk along the street trying to entice drivers of cars that drive by slowly, but you are unable to get anyone to stop.'
+			'You walk along the street trying to entice drivers of cars that drive by, but are unable to get anyone to stop.'
 			act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 			act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 		end
@@ -146,7 +146,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event2':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/hookers' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck, you spot some other girls working the streets as well. It doesn''t look like they are having any better luck than you are.'
+	'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck, you spot some other girls working the streets as well. It doesn''t look like they''re having any luck either.'
 	act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 	act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 	act 'Walk over and talk to them':
@@ -158,8 +158,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event2':
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/hookers' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 			end
-			'You walk over smiling to the other girls, but all you are met with is dark and dangerous looks. Then one of them speaks up. "What the fuck do you want bitch?"'
-			'Taken a bit aback by the anger, you say "I was just coming over to talk and see how the night is going for you guys, been kinda slow for me," trying to be friendly.'
+			'You walk over and smile at the other girls, but are met with dark and dangerous stares. "What the fuck do you want, bitch?" one of them asks.'
+			'You''re taken aback a little, but try to be friendly. "I just wanted to ask how tonight''s been going for you. It''s been kind of slow for me."'
 			'One of them snarls as the others move to partially circle you. "Listen bitch, this is our street, so get the fuck off it before you get hurt!"'
 			act 'Leave and stop working for the night':
 				cla
@@ -174,7 +174,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event2':
 				act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 			end
 			!!act 'Tell her to fuck off':
-			!!i will expand this later when I have time. For now want to get this out for this release.
+			!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
 		else
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
@@ -184,14 +184,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event2':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/hookers' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 			end
 			if ruslan_pimp = 2:
-				'You walk over and introduce yourself to the other girls. One of them starts off kinda bitchy, but the other one tells her you work for Ruslan too, which quickly calms her down. You make small talk with them for a bit. The more experienced girls share tips for the newer girls, ways to help encourage guys to stop and the type of guys to avoid. Occasionally, a car stops and picks up one of the other girls. Other times, one stops and drops a girl off. After a bit, you know you need to get back to work and earn money for Ruslan.'
+				'You walk over and introduce yourself to the other girls. One of them starts off bitchy, but the other one tells her you work for Ruslan too, which quickly calms her down. You make small talk with them, the more experienced girls sharing tips for the newer girls, ways to help encourage guys to stop and the type of guys to avoid. Occasionally, a car stops and picks up one of the other girls. Other times, one stops and drops a girl off. After a while, you know you need to get back to work and earn money for Ruslan.'
 				act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 			else
 				ruslan_pimp = 1
-				'You walk over and introduce yourself to the other girls. One of them asks, "You one of Ruslan''s new girls?"'
-				'You shake your head no. "No, I work only for myself."'
-				'The other girls exchange an uneasy look, then one of them tells you, "You should really change your mind. If you work for Ruslan, most of the guys know to pay up, and the gopniks know to leave you alone. Otherwise, you can find yourself in a bad spot."'
-				'You smile at her. "Thanks for the advice, I will think about it." With that, they excuse themselves, saying that they need to get back to work. You can tell they really don''t want to be seen hanging out with you.'
+				'You walk over and introduce yourself to the other girls. "You one of Ruslan''s new girls?" one of them asks.'
+				'You shake your head. "No, I work for myself."'
+				'The other girls exchange an uneasy look. "You should really change your mind. If you work for Ruslan, most of the guys know to pay up, and the gopniks know to leave you alone. Otherwise, you''ll find yourself in a bad spot," one of them tells you.'
+				'You smile at her. "Thanks for the advice, I''ll think about it." With that, they excuse themselves, saying that they need to get back to work. You can tell they really don''t want to be seen hanging out with you.'
 				act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 				act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 			end
@@ -207,8 +207,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event3':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/street/mugger.jpg"></center>'
 	if ruslan_meet = 0:
 		ruslan_meet = 1
-		'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck, you turn and nearly run into a man who walked directly in front of you. You stop and give him your best smile. "You looking to party handsome?"'
-		'He looks you over like a side of beef, then finally looks into your eyes, which most guys never do. "It''s dangerous for a young thing like you to be out walking the streets this time of night. I can protect you and make sure no one bothers you, just ask any of my other girls how good Ruslan protects them."'
+		'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck, you turn and nearly run into a man who walks directly in front of you. You stop and give him your best smile. "You looking to party, handsome?"'
+		'He looks you over like a side of beef, then finally looks into your eyes, which most guys never do. "It''s dangerous for a young thing like you to be out walking the streets this time of night. I can protect you and make sure no one bothers you. Just ask any of my other girls how good Ruslan protects them."'
 	else
 		'As you walk along the street trying to entice one of the slower moving cars with no luck, you turn and see Ruslan, your would-be pimp, blocking your path.'
 		'You stop as he looks you over. "You come to your senses yet?"'
@@ -217,8 +217,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event3':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 5
 		ruslan_pimp = 2
-		'You nod your head in agreement. "Yeah you''re right, having some protection would be a good thing."'
-		'When you say that, he is all smiles suddenly and pulls you up beside him as he wraps his arm around you. "Good good, I knew you were a smart girl. Now every Friday I will come by and collect my half of what you make. You better not hold out on me, the other girls will tell me if you do. Now here is my number. If anyone refuses to pay or you have problems, you call." Once you add his number to your contact list, he slaps you on the ass. "Now get to work!" With that, he turns and walks off, leaving you to wonder if this was a good idea.'
+		'You nod your head in agreement. "Yeah, you''re right. Having some protection would be a good thing."'
+		'He smiles and pulls you up beside him as he wraps his arm around you. "Good good, I knew you were a smart girl. I''ll come by every Friday and collect my half of what you make. You better not hold out on me, because the other girls will tell me if you do. Now here is my number. If anyone refuses to pay or you have problems, you call." Once you add his number to your contact list, he slaps you on the ass. "Now get to work!"' 
+		'With that, he turns and walks away, leaving you to wonder if this was a good idea.'
 		act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 		act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 	end
@@ -229,8 +230,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event3':
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 			gs 'stat'
 			minut += 5
-			'You shake your head no. "Thank you, but I am doing ok."'
-			'He frowns, and his eyes take on a hard glint. For a moment, you think he might do something, but finally, he just nods. "Very well have it your way, but don''t say I didn''t warn you. I will check back on you some other time and see if you came to your senses yet."'
+			'You shake your head. "Thanks, but I''m doing just fine by myself."'
+			'He frowns, and his eyes take on a hard glint. For a moment, you think he might do something, but he just nods. "Very well. Have it your way, but don''t say I didn''t warn you. I''ll check back on you some other time and see if you come to your senses."'
 			act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'end'
 			act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 		end
@@ -238,12 +239,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event3':
 		act 'Refuse his deal (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 	end	
 	!!act 'Be a smart ass':
-	!!for now commenting this out until I can finish it.
 	!!	*clr & cla
 	!!	minut += 5
 	!!	gs 'pain', 3, 'cheeks', 'slap'
-	!!	'You laugh at him trying to act all big and bad. "Like someone as scrawny as you could protect me, what you mean is you want to live off my pussy while you are to pathetic earn your own money."'
-	!!	'The words barely leave your mouth before you feel the stinging of the slap across your face. Blinking to clear you vision as you rub your cheek, you notice he has pulled up his shirt to reveal the butt of a pistol. Which quickly makes you change your mind about fighting back. "You''re new here so I will let that slide, but you best learn your place and fast bitch, before you end up dead!" With that he turns and walks off but you doubt you have seen the last of him.'
+	!!	'You laugh at him trying to act tough. "Like someone as scrawny as you could protect me! What you mean is you want to live off my pussy because you''re too pathetic earn your own money!"'
+	!!	'The words barely leave your mouth before you feel the stinging of the slap across your face. Blinking to clear your vision as you rub your cheek, you notice that he''s pulled up his shirt to reveal the butt of a pistol, which quickly makes you change your mind about fighting back. "You''re new here so I''ll let that slide, but you best learn your place fast before you end up dead, bitch!"' 
+	!!	'With that, he turns and walks away, but you doubt that you''ve seen the last of him.'
 	!!	act 'Stop working for the night': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 	!!	act 'Keep working the street': gt 'street_walker', 'event1'
 end
@@ -262,17 +263,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
 	if prst_caught = 0:
 		prst_caught = 1
-		'"What''s your price?" a man asks from behind you.'
-		'"The price is-" you stop in your tracks as you turn to notice a man dressed in all black. You stare for a moment. He''s giving you a weird vibe, looking at you with a cold and calculating gaze. Something tells you to play it cool, so you change your answer. "Uh, I''m sorry, sir, can you repeat that? I don''t think I heard you clearly..." you try to lie.'
-		'The man''s eyes narrow dangerously, and as he moves, you catch a glimpse of a police badge clipped to his hip. He''s a cop! "Don''t play dumb, girl. Go on, finish what you were going to say before!"'
+		'"What''s your price?" a man asks you from behind.'
+		'"The price is-" you stop in your tracks as you turn and notice a man dressed in all black. He''s giving you a weird vibe, looking at you with a cold and calculating gaze. Something tells you to play it cool, so you change your answer. "Uh, I''m sorry, sir, can you repeat that? I don''t think I heard you clearly..."'
+		'The man''s eyes narrow dangerously, and as he moves, you catch a glimpse of a police badge clipped to his hip. He''s a cop! "Don''t play dumb, girl. Go on, finish what you were going to say!"'
 
-		act 'Keep on lying': gt 'street_walker', 'policelie'
+		act 'Keep lying': gt 'street_walker', 'policelie'
 		act 'Offer him a bribe': gt 'street_walker', 'policebribe'
 		act 'Offer him a blowjob': gt 'street_walker', 'policeblowjob'
 	else
-		'"Didn''t I tell you to stay away from here?" you hear a familiar voice.'
+		'"Didn''t I tell you to stay away from here?" you hear a familiar voice ask.'
 		'You turn around and find that it''s the cop from before. "Y-Yes sir, you did..." You stare down at the ground.'
-		'"So what are you doing here then, whoring again?" he brashly asks.'
+		'"So what are you doing here then? Whoring again?" he brashly asks.'
 
 		act 'Try to explain': gt 'street_walker', 'policeexp'
 		act 'Offer him a bribe': gt 'street_walker', 'policebribe'
@@ -296,15 +297,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event5':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/bargin' + rand(1,3) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'A car slows down and pulls up to the curb where you are walking. He is obviously looking at you, so you walk over to him. As you do, he rolls down his window. You bend over and practically lean into his window. "You looking to party handsome?"'
+	'A car slows down and pulls up to the curb where you''re walking, so you walk over to him. As you do, he rolls down his window. You bend over and practically lean into his window. "You looking to party, handsome?"'
 	'He looks you over as best he can and licks his lips. "How much?"'
-	'You smile at him. "That depends on what you want to do." You take a little time listening to his wants and telling him the price before he decides.'
+	'You smile at him. "That depends on what you want..." You take a little time listening to his requests and telling him the price before he decides.'
 	if rand(0,1) = 0:
 		'He decides he wants a blowjob.'
 		act 'Accept':
 			cla
 			*nl
-			'With that and the price decided, you get into the car.'
+			'The deed and the price decided, you get into the car.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'blowjob'
 		end
 		act 'Decline': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
@@ -313,7 +314,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event5':
 		act 'Accept':
 			cla
 			*nl
-			'With that and the price decided, you get into the car.'
+			'The deed and the price decided, you get into the car.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'vaginal'
 		end
 		act 'Decline': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
@@ -322,7 +323,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'event5':
 		act 'Accept':
 			cla
 			*nl
-			'With that and the price decided, you get into the car.'
+			'The deed and the price decided, you get into the car.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'street_walker', 'anal'
 		end
 		act 'Decline': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
@@ -335,23 +336,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/ridefront.jpg"></center>'
-	'With the price settled, you walk around and open the passenger door and slide into the car. You barely have time to close the door before he pulls away. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. Once he does, he looks over at you and says, "This looks good." His eyes wander over you body, and he leans back in his seat.'
+	'With the price settled, you climb into the car. You barely have time to close the door before he pulls away. He drives until he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. Once he does, he looks over at you. "This looks good." His eyes wander over your body as he leans back in his seat.'
 	act 'Unbutton his pants':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You lean over and slowly start to unbutton his pants, teasing him a little. You can already see his pants start to bulge, and you can feel his hardness under you fingers as you work his buttons. You open his fly wide and pull his underwear down enough, as his hard dick springs free. You smile at him as you wrap you hands around his cock and start stroking him. He starts to moan softly almost at once.'
+		'You lean over and feel his hardness under your fingers as you unbutton his pants before opening his fly and pulling his underwear down, allowing his hard dick to spring free. You smile at him as you wrap your hand around his cock and start stroking it, causing him to moan softly.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'prostitution'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Suck his dick':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj2.jpg"></center>'
-			'He starts to get antsy, obviously wanting more. You can feel the head of his dick already getting slick with his precum. You lean over and slowly take his cock into your mouth, starting to suck his dick as you keep stroking it. You feel his hand roughly pull up your shirt and begin pawing and squeezing at your breasts as you do.'
+			'You can feel the head of his dick already getting slick with his precum. You lean over and slowly take his cock into your mouth, starting to suck his dick as you keep stroking it. You feel his hand roughly pull up your shirt and begin pawing and squeezing at your breasts as you do.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Keep sucking':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj3.jpg"></center>'
-				'Keeping your lips locked around his shaft, you bob your head up and down sucking his dick. Slowly, you work him deeper into your mouth, eventually removing your hand so you can take him as deeply as you can down your throat.'
+				'Keeping your lips locked around his shaft, you bob your head up and down, slowly working him deeper into your mouth. You eventually remove your hand so you can take him as deeply as you can down your throat.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finish him':
@@ -359,12 +360,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob':
 					money += 500
 					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'a prostitution client', 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj4.jpg"></center>'
-					'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue as spurt after spurt fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until there is no more. You rise up, showing him his own cum and then swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants. Sliding the seat back forward, he pulls out a wad of cash and hands it to you.'
-					'You spend a few moments straightening up your clothes and checking your makeup as he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. He pulls up to the curb and stops. Now he seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that he quickly pulls away.'
+					'You soon feel the hot splash of cum hitting your throat as spurt after spurt fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until he stops. You sit up and show him your cum coated tongue before swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly puts his dick away and rebuttons his pants. Sliding the seat back forward, he pulls out a wad of cash and hands it to you.'
+					'You take a few minutes to straighten up your clothes and check your makeup as he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. Pulling up to the curb, he seems impatient for you to get out as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and climb out of the car before closing the door. He quickly pulls away and disappears into the night.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
-					act 'Get dropped off': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
+					act 'Get back to work': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 				end
 			end
 		end
@@ -377,21 +378,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vaginal':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/rideback.jpg"></center>'
-	'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind him. Once you close the door, he pulls away from the curb. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area. Stopping the car, he says, "This looks good." Then he gets out of the car and walks to the back door. You slide over, giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
+	'With the price settled, you climb into the backseat behind him. Once you close the door, he pulls away from the curb and drives until he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. "This looks good." He gets out of the car and walks to the back door. You slide over, giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
 	act 'Wait':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/fuck1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You wait to let him take control of the situation, you know most guys like that. After a few moments of him looking around to make sure no one is there, he starts to unbutton his pants, pulling them down. He reaches over, grabs you by the hair and pulls your head down to his dick. You open your mouth and take his still mostly flaccid cock in your mouth, while your hand strokes the shaft.'
+		'You let him take control of the situation and, after making sure no one is around, he unbuttons his pants and pulls them down. He then reaches over, grabs you by the hair and pulls your head down to his dick. You open your mouth and take his still mostly flaccid cock in your mouth, while your hand starts stroking the shaft.'
 		act 'Suck his dick':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/fuck2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Between your mouth and hand, it doesn''t take you to long to get him hard. He starts to moan a bit, "Yeah that''s it suck my cock you dirty whore." He seems to enjoy talking to you. You don''t mind, it pays all the same. You keep sucking as he continues to verbally degrade you.'
+			'Between your mouth and hand, it doesn''t take you too long to get him hard. "Yeah, that''s it. Suck my cock, you dirty whore!" You keep sucking as he continues to verbally degrade you.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Let him fuck you':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/fuck3.jpg"></center>'
-				'He pulls your head off his dick and says, "Get undressed and lie back." You quickly undress and lie on the seat on your back, spreading your legs. As you do, you see him sliding a condom on. With both the condom and you in place, he moves over and slides on top of you. He quickly and roughly shoves his dick inside of your pussy, the lubrication from the condom helps. Then he starts fucking you as hard and fast as he can, grunting the whole time, occasionally banging your head or shoulder against the arm rest on the door. Not the most comfortable of places to have sex, but then comfort isn''t why you are here.'
+				'After a few minutes, he pulls your head off his dick and you quickly undress and lie on the seat on your back, spreading your legs. As you do, you see him sliding a condom on before he moves over and climbs on top of you. He quickly and roughly shoves his dick inside your pussy and starts fucking you as hard and fast as he can, banging your head against the arm rest on the door.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finish him':
@@ -399,12 +400,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vaginal':
 					money += 1200
 					gs 'cum_call', 'breasts', 'a prostitution client', 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/fuck4.jpg"></center>'
-					'He suddenly pulls out of you and tears the condom off. This is followed by him climbing further on you as he starts jerking off. Within seconds, his hot cum starts flying, landing all over your breasts as he moans loudly. Once finally finished, he climbs off you and starts to get dressed, stopping briefly to hand you a wad of cash.'
-					'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed. As you do, he gets out, gets back into the driver''s seat and drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. Pulling up to the curb and stopping, he now seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that, he quickly pulls away.'
+					'He suddenly pulls out of you and tears the condom off. This is followed by him climbing further on you as he starts jerking off. Within seconds, his cum starts splattering over your breasts as he moans loudly. Once he finishes, he climbs off you and starts to get dressed, stopping briefly to hand you a wad of cash.'
+					'You spend a few minutes getting cleaned up and dressed. As you do, he gets back into the driver''s seat and drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. Pulling up to the curb, he seems impatient for you to get out as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and climb out of the car before closing the door. He quickly pulls away and disappears into the night.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
-					act 'Get dropped off': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
+					act 'Get back to work': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 				end
 			end
 		end
@@ -420,34 +421,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo1.jpg"></center>'
-		'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind the older guy, he is easily old enough to be your father. Once you close the door, he looks at you in the rearview mirror. "Put on your seat belt. Safety first."'
+		'With the price settled, you climb into the backseat behind him. Once you close the door, he looks at you in the rearview mirror. "Put on your seat belt. Safety first."'
 		act 'Go for a ride':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/rideback.jpg"></center>'
-			'He pulls away from the curb and drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area. Stopping the car, he says, "This looks good." Then he gets out of the car and walks to the back door. You slide over, giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
+			'He pulls away from the curb and drives until he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. "This looks good." He gets out of the car and walks to the back door. You slide over, giving him room as he gets in the back with you.'
 			act 'Get undressed':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo2.jpg"></center>'
-				'He looks you over a moment. "Can you undress." When you start to, he quickly adds, "Slowly." You smile at him and make a show of slowly getting naked for him. You can see him already licking his lips. Once you are fully naked, you slowly unbutton his pants, pulling them and his underwear down.'
+				'He looks you over. "Can you undress?" When you start to do so, he quickly adds "Slowly." You smile at him and make a show of slowly getting naked for him. Once you''re fully naked, you slowly unbutton his pants before pulling them and his underwear down.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Suck his dick':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo3.jpg"></center>'
-					'With his hard dick standing tall to get your attention, you lean over and take it into your mouth and start sucking his cock, working the shaft or his balls with one of your hands. He just leans back and moans softly, obviously enjoying what you are doing.'
+					'With his hard dick standing tall to get your attention, you lean over, take it into your mouth and start sucking while working the shaft or his balls with one of your hands as he leans back and moans softly.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Get fucked':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo4.jpg"></center>'
-						'After a time, he speaks up. "Lie back, I want to fuck you." You rise up and then lie back in the seat, spreading your legs as you do. He moves between your legs and rubs your clit a bit to get you wetter. Once he feels you are wet enough, he slides his dick inside of you and starts to slowly fuck you. The wetter you get the faster he starts to fuck you.'
+						'After a few minutes, he speaks up. "Lie back, I want to fuck you." You sit up before lying back in the seat, spreading your legs as you do. He moves between your legs and rubs your clit a little before he slides his dick inside you and starts slowly fucking you. The wetter you get, the faster he fucks you.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'prostitution'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Take it in the ass':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo5.jpg"></center>'
-							'When he pulls out, he starts to use his hands to help reposition you as he says, "Roll over and get on your knees. I want to fuck that pretty little ass of yours now." With his help, you quickly do as he says and get on your elbows and knees, with your ass up for him. You feel him press his dick against your anus before he slides it in. When you tense up a bit, he stops to give you a moment to get used to it before he slides it the rest of the way in.'
-							'He slowly works his way balls deep into your ass, taking his time. It is sweet of him but not really necessary, you are used to being fucked and you are here for the money. You moan loudly like you are loving it, you know guys like that. He picks up the pace and starts fucking your ass harder.'
+							'When he pulls out, he uses his hands to help you reposition. "I want to fuck that pretty little ass of yours now." With his help, you quickly do as he says and get on all fours with your ass in the air. You feel him press his dick against your anus before he slides it in. When you tense up, he stops to let you get used to it before he slides it the rest of the way in.'
+							'He slowly works his way balls deep into your ass. You moan loudly as he picks up the pace and starts fucking your ass harder.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'prostitution'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Finish him':
@@ -455,12 +456,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 								money += 1500
 								gs 'cum_call','face', 'a prostitution client', 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analo6.jpg"></center>'
-								'He grunts out, "I''m about to cum." As he pulls out of your ass, you turn around and start jerking him off with your hand, aiming his cock right at your face. Within moment, hot sprays of cum start splattering against your face. You keep jerking him until you have milked him of every last drop.'
-								'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed. As you do, he gets out of the back and gets back into the drivers seat. He waits for you to finish getting dressed, cleaning up and putting your seat belt back on before he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. He pulls up to the curb and stops. Once stopped, he passes you a wad of cash. As you get out of the car, he opens his window and says, "I had a great time, maybe I will see you again." With that, he rolls up his window and drives off.'
+								'"I''m about to cum!" he grunts. As he pulls out of your ass, you turn around and start jerking him off with your hand, aiming his cock right at your face. Within seconds, cum starts splattering across your face. You keep jerking him until you''ve milked him of every last drop.'
+								'You spend a few minutes getting cleaned up and dressed. As you do, he gets back into the driver''s seat. He waits for you to finish and put your seatbelt back on before he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. He pulls up to the curb and stops before he passes you a wad of cash. As you get out of the car, he opens his window. "I had a great time. Maybe I''ll see you again." With that, he rolls up his window and drives away.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'prostitution'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
-								act 'Get dropped off': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
+								act 'Get back to work': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 							end
 						end
 					end
@@ -473,7 +474,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy1.jpg"></center>'
-		'With the price settled, you step back to the back door and slide into the backseat behind him. He looks at you in the rearview mirror and eyes you up and down. You smile at him and lean back to give him a good look.'
+		'With the price settled, you climb into the backseat behind him. He looks at you in the rearview mirror and eyes you up and down. You smile at him and lean back to give him a good look.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'unknown'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Go for a ride':
@@ -483,26 +484,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 			act 'Get undressed':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy2.jpg"></center>'
-				'He looks you over a moment. "Get undressed, I want to see what I am paying for." You smile at him and make a show of slowly getting naked for him. You can see him already licking his lips. Once you are fully naked, you slowly unbutton his pants, pulling them and his underwear down.'
+				'He looks you over. "Undress. I want to see what I''m paying for." You smile at him and make a show of slowly getting naked for him. Once you''re fully naked, you slowly unbutton his pants before pulling them and his underwear down.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Suck his dick':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy3.jpg"></center>'
-					'With his hard dick standing tall to get your attention, you lean over and take it into your mouth and start sucking his cock, working the shaft or his balls with one of your hands. He just leans back and moans softly, obviously enjoying what you are doing. You feel his hand slap you on the ass a few times, before he slides a finger into your pussy to get it nice and wet, then slides it into your ass and fingers you as you blow him.'
+					'With his hard dick standing tall to get your attention, you lean over, take it into your mouth and start sucking while working the shaft or his balls with one of your hands as he leans back and moans softly. You feel his hand slap you on the ass a few times before he slides a finger into your pussy to get it wet, then slides it into your ass and fingers you as you blow him.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Get fucked':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy4.jpg"></center>'
-						'After a time, he speaks up. "Lie back, I want to fuck you." You rise up and then lie back in the seat, spreading your legs as you do. He moves between your legs, slides his dick inside of you and starts to fuck you. He slowly picks up his pace, fucking you faster, then he pulls out and slaps you on the hip. "Roll over bitch, I want to fuck your ass."'
+						'After a few minutes, he speaks up. "Lie back, I want to fuck you." You sit up before lying back in the seat, spreading your legs as you do. He moves between your legs and rubs your clit a little before he slides his dick inside you. He slowly picks up his pace, fucking you faster before he pulls out and slaps you on the hip. "Roll over bitch, I want to fuck your ass."'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'prostitution'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Take it in the ass':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy5.jpg"></center>'
-							'You roll over and get on your elbows and knees, with your ass up for him. You feel him press his dick against your anus before he shoves it in. When you tense up a bit, he grabs ahold of your hips so you can''t pull away and shoves it the rest of the way into your ass...'
-							'He pounds his way balls deep into your ass, picking up the pace and starting to fuck your ass harder. He starts slapping your ass as he pounds it as hard and fast as he can.'
+							'You roll over and get on all fours with your ass in the air. You feel him pressing his dick against your anus before he shoves it in. When you tense up, he grabs hold of your hips so you can''t pull away and shoves it the rest of the way into your ass.'
+							'He pounds his way balls deep into your ass, picking up the pace fucking you harder as he slaps your ass.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'prostitution'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Finish him':
@@ -510,12 +511,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 								money += 1500
 								gs 'cum_call','breasts', 'a prostitution client', 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/analy6.jpg"></center>'
-								'He grunts out, "I''m about to cum." As he pulls out of your ass, he roughly flips you over and straddles you as he starts jerking off. Soon his cum is flying, landing all over you breasts.'
-								'You spend a few moments getting cleaned up and dressed. Not even waiting for you to finish, he gets out of the back and gets back into the driver''s seat. During the drive back, he tosses a wad of cash back, most of it ending up on the floor. You quickly gather it all up as he stops at the same curb he picked you up from. You barely even close the door after you get out before he pulls away.'
+								'"I''m about to cum!" he grunts as he pulls out of your ass and roughly flips you over before straddling you and jerking off. His cum is soon splattering all over your breasts.'
+								'You spend a few minutes getting cleaned up and dressed. Not even waiting for you to finish, he gets back into the driver''s seat. During the drive back, he tosses a wad of cash back, most of it ending up on the floor. You quickly gather it all up as he stops at the same curb he picked you up from. You barely even close the door after you get out before he pulls away.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'prostitution'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
-								act 'Get dropped off': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
+								act 'Get back to work': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 							end
 						end
 					end
@@ -531,27 +532,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeblowjob':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Street</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
-	'You desperately look around and try to come up with an excuse. "Well girl?" the police officer asks.'
-	'You clear your throat, "Yes, sir you''ve caught me, I''ve been prostituting. But how about I show you a good time and you let me go?" You divert your eyes towards his genitalia while licking your lips.'
+	'You desperately look around and try to come up with an excuse. "Well?" he impatiently asks.'
+	'You clear your throat. "Yes sir, you''ve caught me. I''ve been prostituting, but how about I show you a good time and you let me go?" You divert your eyes towards his crotch while licking your lips.'
 
 	if rand(0,5) = 0:
-		'The police officer grunts and points towards his car. You walk around, open the passenger door and slide inside. You barely have time to close the door before he pulls away. He drives for a little bit till he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. Once he does, he looks over at you and says, "This looks good." His eyes wander over you body, and he leans back in his seat.'
+		'The officer grunts and points towards his car. You climb inside, barely having time to close the door before he pulls away. He drives until he finds a pretty deserted area and stops the car. Once he does, he looks over at you. "This looks good." His eyes wander over your body as he leans back in his seat.'
 		act 'Unbutton his pants':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You lean over and slowly start to unbutton his pants, teasing him a little. You can already see his pants start to bulge, and you can feel his hardness under you fingers as you work his buttons. You open his fly wide and pull his underwear down enough, as his hard dick springs free. You smile at him as you wrap you hands around his cock and start stroking him. He starts to moan softly almost at once.'
+			'You lean over and feel his hardness under your fingers as you unbutton his pants before opening his fly and pulling his underwear down, allowing his hard dick to spring free. You smile at him as you wrap your hand around his cock and start stroking it, causing him to moan softly.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'prostitution'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Suck his dick':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj2.jpg"></center>'
-				'He starts to get antsy, obviously wanting more. You can feel the head of his dick already getting slick with his pre-cum. You lean over and slowly take his cock into your mouth, starting to suck his dick as you keep stroking it. You feel his hand roughly pull up your shirt and being pawing and squeezing at your breasts as you do.'
+				'You can feel the head of his dick already getting slick with his precum. You lean over and slowly take his cock into your mouth, starting to suck his dick as you keep stroking it. You feel his hand roughly pull up your shirt and begin pawing and squeezing at your breasts as you do.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Keep sucking':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj3.jpg"></center>'
-					'Keeping your lips locked around his shaft, you bob your head up and down sucking his dick. Slowly, you work him deeper into your mouth, eventually removing your hand so you can take him as deeply as you can down your throat.'
+					'Keeping your lips locked around his shaft, you bob your head up and down, slowly working him deeper into your mouth. You eventually remove your hand so you can take him as deeply as you can down your throat.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'prostitution'
 					gs 'stat'
 					if rand(1,10) > 2:
@@ -559,11 +560,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeblowjob':
 							*clr & cla
 							gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'a police officer', 1
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj4.jpg"></center>'
-							'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue as spurt after spurt of it fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until there is no more. You rise up, showing him his own cum and then swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants.'
-							'You spend a few moments straightening up your clothes and checking your makeup as he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. He pulls up to the curb and stops. Now he seems impatient for you to get out, as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and get out of the car, closing the door. With that, he quickly pulls away.'
+							'You soon feel the hot splash of cum hitting your throat as spurt after spurt fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until he stops. You sit up and show him your cum coated tongue before swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly puts his dick away and rebuttons his pants.'
+							'You take a few minutes to straighten up your clothes and check your makeup as he drives you back to the street corner he picked you up on. Pulling up to the curb, he seems impatient for you to get out as he looks around to see if anyone is watching. You sigh and climb out of the car before closing the door. He quickly pulls away and disappears into the night.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
-							act 'Get dropped off': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
+							act 'Get back to work': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 						end
 					else
 						act 'Finish him':
@@ -571,9 +572,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeblowjob':
 							prst_bribe = 2
 							gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'a police officer', 1
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/bj4.jpg"></center>'
-							'As you suck him, you feel the hot splash of cum hit your tongue as spurt after spurt of it fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until there is no more. You rise up, showing him his own cum and then swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly slips his dick away and rebuttons his pants.'
-							'You spend a few moments straightening up your clothes and checking your makeup as he continues driving on. "Where are you taking me?" you ask.'
-							'"What girl? You thought this was enough? No, no, no... I''ll be taking you to the police station where you belong," he mockingly answers as he quickly speeds towards the police station.'
+							'You soon feel the hot splash of cum hitting your throat as spurt after spurt fills your mouth. He moans loudly as he fills your mouth with sperm, and you keep sucking until he stops. You sit up and show him your cum coated tongue before swallowing it. He gives you a brief smile, then quickly puts his dick away and rebuttons his pants.'
+							'You spend a few minutes straightening up your clothes and checking your makeup as he continues driving. "Where are you taking me?" you ask.'
+							'"What? You thought that was enough? No, I''m taking you to the police station where you belong," he mockingly answers as he quickly speeds towards the police station.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
 
@@ -587,8 +588,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeblowjob':
 		prst_bribe = 2
 		*nl
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-		'"What is wrong with you girl? Are you trying to solicit a member of the law?" the police office angrily responds.'
-		'"N-No officer. I was just thinking the two of us could have a good time..." you try once again, maybe he misunderstood you.'
+		'"Are you trying to solicit an officer of the law?" he angrily responds.'
+		'"N-No officer! I was just thinking the two of us could have a good time..." you try once again.'
 		'"That''s it! You''re coming with me, whore!" He turns you around, cuffs you and leads you to the police car. He shoves you in the back and quickly drives off towards the police station.'
 
 		act 'Drive to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'prst'
@@ -600,28 +601,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policelie':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
-	'You swallow hard and let slip a worried chuckle. "R-right... well, to answer your question, the time is..."'
-	'"The <i>time</i>?" the officer interrupts, his lips twisting into a deeper scowl. He takes a step closer and you catch a whiff of stale coffee and cigarettes.'
+	'You swallow hard and let out a nervous giggle. "R-right... Well, to answer your question... The time is..."'
+	'"The <i>time</i>?" he interrupts, his lips twisting into a deeper scowl. He takes a step closer and you catch a whiff of stale coffee and cigarettes.'
 	'"Yeah, isn''t that what you asked?" you ask innocently.'
-	'Unamused, the officer crosses his arms over his chest. "I know what you''re doing out here, lying won''t get you anywhere except a visit to the police station."'
-	'Your eyes immediately drop to the ground at the mention of being arrested. Heart racing, palms sweaty, you take a deep breath before nodding slowly. "I''m sorry, sir... you''re right, I was out here working..."'
-	'He scoffs. "What, suddenly you''re shy about it? Let me hear you <i>say</i> it," he orders coldly, and all you can do is nod again.'
-	'"I was... I''m a prostitute, sir..." you say quietly.'
+	'Unamused, the officer crosses his arms over his chest. "I know what you''re doing out here, and lying won''t get you anywhere except a visit to the police station."'
+	'Your eyes immediately drop to the ground at the mention of being arrested. Your heart racing, you take a deep breath before nodding slowly. "I''m sorry, sir... You''re right. I was out here working..."'
+	'He scoffs. "What, suddenly you''re shy about it? Let me hear you <i>say</i> it," he orders coldly.'
+	'"I was... I am a prostitute, sir..." you say quietly.'
 
 	act 'Beg him to let you go':
 		*clr & cla
 		if rand(1,10) > 4:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
-			*nl
-			'You keep your gaze glued to the ground until you hear him sigh heavily. "Get out of here. If I see you again, I''m taking you in, understand?"'
-			'You look up in disbelief, unable to figure out what to say for a moment. "O-oh, of course! You won''t see me again, I promise!" Not wanting to miss your chance, you get the hell out of there.'
-
+			'You keep your gaze glued to the ground until you hear him sigh heavily. "Get out of here! If I see you again, I''m taking you in, understand?"'
+			'You look up in disbelief, unable to figure out what to say. "O-oh, of course! You won''t see me again, I promise!" Not wanting to miss your chance, you quickly leave.'
 			act 'Walk away': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-			*nl
-			'"The only way you''re going to learn is if you''re punished," he shakes his head in disgust. "Turn around, hands behind your back." In a matter of seconds, you''re cuffed and being tossed into the back seat of an unmarked police car. You sit in silence as he drives you back to the police station for booking.'
-
+			'He shakes his head in disgust. "The only way you''re going to learn is if you''re punished. Turn around, hands behind your back." In a matter of seconds, you''re cuffed and being tossed into the back seat of an unmarked police car. You sit in silence as he drives you back to the police station for booking.'
 			act 'Drive to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'prst'
 		end
 	end
@@ -632,27 +629,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policeexp':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
-	*nl
-	'You wrack your brain for a good answer but come up with nothing. "No... I was just... on my way home." You look up and bat your eyelashes innocently, but he seems unfazed.'
+	'You wrack your brain for a good answer, but come up with nothing. "No... I was just... on my way home." You look up and bat your eyelashes innocently, but he seems unfazed.'
 	'His expression darkens. "You think I''m stupid, girl?" he barks back so suddenly and loudly that it makes you jump slightly. You quickly shake your head and try to apologize, but he cuts you off. "I''ve been watching you for a while now, and all you''ve been doing is slinking up and down the streets looking for customers!"'
 	'You swallow hard as your eyes look everywhere except at him. "I... I think you might have me confused with someone else..." You start to take a step back, but the officer grabs your upper arm with an iron grip and pulls you back close.'
-	'"You really wanna keep lying to me?! You''re just making this a lot worse for yourself..." He tightens his grip even more, and you wince softly. It''s not enough to really hurt you, but it gets his point across.'
-	'"Alright, alright, I was! I was whoring!" you admit with a huff. "Please... please just give me a break! I don''t want to go to jail... I can''t!" Before the last words are out your mouth, you start to sniffle and soon tears are rolling down your cheeks.'
+	'"You''re really going to keep lying to me?! You''re just making this a whole lot worse for yourself..." He tightens his grip even more, and you wince softly. It''s not enough to really hurt you, but it gets his point across.'
+	'"Alright, alright! I was whoring!" you admit with a huff. "Please... please just give me a break! I don''t want to go to jail... I can''t!" Before the last words are out your mouth, you start to sniffle and tears are soon rolling down your cheeks.'
 
 	act 'Beg him to let you go':
 		*clr & cla
 		if rand(1,10) > 4:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
-			*nl
-			'"...Alright, stop your crying..." the officer says, but you''re barely able to hear him between your sobbing.'
-			'"Wh... what?" you ask when you feel him release his grip on your arm. Through blurry eyes, you see the officer is giving you a pitying yet uncomfortable look. "You''re letting me go?"'
-			'He clears his throat awkwardly. "Yeah, I am... but you better head straight home. I don''t want to see you out here again, understand?"'
+			'"Alright, stop your crying!" he says, but you''re barely able to hear him between your sobbing.'
+			'"Wh... What?" you ask when you feel him release his grip on your arm. Through blurry eyes, you see the officer giving you a pitying yet uncomfortable look. "You''re letting me go?"'
+			'He clears his throat awkwardly. "Yes, I am, but you better head straight home. I don''t want to see you out here again, understand?"'
 			'You quickly nod, wiping away the tears as you compose yourself. "Thank you!" you say, but he just responds with a grunt before waving you away.'
 
 			act 'Walk away': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-			*nl
 			'"Save it for someone that cares, whore!" Without hesitation, he has you spun around, your arm twisted behind your back as he reaches for his handcuffs. Your crying only gets louder as he drags you to his unmarked police car and shoves you into the back. On the drive back to the station, he gets tired of hearing you and turns on the radio, drowning you out completely.'
 
 			act 'Drive to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'prst'
@@ -665,10 +659,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policebribe':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/bribe.jpg"></center>'
-	*nl
-	'Your heart skips a beat as you think of what to do! He must already know you''re out here whoring, so lying would definitely get you into more trouble. You heard that some girls offer sexual favors to avoid trouble, but it feels like too much of a risk. As you stand there squirming, you suddenly get an idea and hope it''ll get you out of this.'
-	*nl
-	'"Listen... I have some money... y''know, that I earned tonight?" You start to reach for your pocket, but the cop tenses, obviously wary of what you might be grabbing for. "No, no! It''s just money, I promise!" you reassure him as you slowly pull out a handful of crumpled bills. "This is all I have, and you can have it if... you let me go," you say quietly, your hand held out to him. He looks at you then at the money with an unreadable expression. The silence seems to stretch on forever until you speak up again, trying to further convince him. "Please, sir... I really don''t want to go to jail..."'
+	'Your heart skips a beat as you think of what to do. He must already know you''re out here whoring, so lying would definitely get you into more trouble. You heard that some girls offer sexual favors to avoid trouble, but that feels like too much of a risk. As you stand there squirming, you suddenly get an idea and hope it''ll get you out of this.'
+	'"I have some money that I... earned tonight..." You start to reach for your pocket, but he tenses, wary of what you might be grabbing for. "No, no! It''s just money, I promise!" you reassure him as you slowly pull out a handful of crumpled bills. "This is all I have, and you can have it if... you let me go," you say quietly, your hand held out to him. He looks at you, then at the money with an unreadable expression. The silence seems to stretch on forever until you speak again, trying to further convince him. "Please, sir... I really don''t want to go to jail..."'
 
 	act 'Wait for his reaction': gt 'street_walker', 'briberyreaction'
 end
@@ -682,47 +674,36 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'briberyreaction':
 
 	if temp_rand <= 4:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/bribeaccepted.jpg"></center>'
-		*nl
-		'The cop sighs heavily before taking the money. He takes a moment to count it, occasionally glancing your way as he does. "Don''t think this will work every time," he warns as he pockets the money. "Don''t get any ideas about telling someone about this, I know some of you girls have tried it and believe me, it never ends well for them. No one will believe a loose-lipped whore over a cop..."'
-		*nl
-		'You swallow hard, his words sending a shiver down your spine. "Now get out of here before I change my mind," he orders roughly. You don''t even bother responding as you quickly shuffle down the street until the cop is out of sight.'
-
+		'He sighs heavily before taking the money and counting it, occasionally glancing your way as he does. "Don''t think this will work every time," he warns as he pockets the money. "Don''t get any ideas about telling anyone about this. I know some of you girls have tried it and believe me, it never ends well for them. No one will believe a loose-lipped whore over a cop..."'
+		'You swallow hard, his words sending a shiver down your spine. "Now get out of here before I change my mind!" he orders roughly. You don''t even bother responding as you quickly shuffle down the street until the cop is out of sight.'
+		
 		act 'Walk away': gt 'street_walker', 'work'
 	elseif temp_rand <= 7:
 		prst_bribe = 1
 		gs 'pain', 6, 'armL', 'break'
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-		*nl
-		'His lips turn up into a disgusted sneer. Before you can react, he slaps your hand away, the money exploding out into the air and onto the ground. "You think I can be paid off, whore?!" he snarls as you stand there holding your red and stinging hand. You knew there was a chance this could happen, but you didn''t expect him to get physical.'
-		*nl
+		'His lips turn up into a disgusted sneer. Before you can react, he slaps your hand away, the money flying into the air and onto the ground. "You think I can be paid off, whore?!" he snarls as you clutch your red and stinging hand. You knew there was a chance this could happen, but you didn''t expect him to get physical.'
 		'"I''m sorry! Please, let me--" You try to plead with him, but he makes a sudden move towards you that causes you to flinch, fearing he''s going to hit you.'
-		*nl
 		'"Shut the hell up, slut!" He grabs your arm and twists it behind you, forcing you to turn your back to him or potentially suffer a broken limb. He slaps the cuffs around your wrists, making sure they''re extra tight before shoving you into the back of his unmarked police car to drive you to the station.'
 
 		act 'Drive to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'prst'
 	elseif temp_rand <= 9:
 		prst_bribe = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-		*nl
-		'The cop sighs heavily before taking the money. He takes a moment to count it, occasionally glancing your way as he does. "It''s one thing to be a whore, but to be dumb too?" he laughs cruelly as he pockets the money. You stare at him, hurt and confused before you realize that he''s still planning to arrest you. Your first instinct is to run, maybe he''s just trying to scare you and won''t chase after you, but if he''s being serious then it could mean you getting hurt.'
-		*nl
+		'The cop sighs heavily before taking the money and counting it, occasionally glancing your way as he does. "It''s one thing to be a whore, but to be dumb too?" he laughs cruelly as he pockets the money. You stare at him, hurt and confused before you realize that he''s still planning to arrest you. Your first instinct is to run, but if he''s being serious then it could mean you getting hurt.'
 		'"But... but I gave you the money..." you whine in defeat, but it only makes the sadistic grin on his face widen.'
+		'"Yeah, you did... Before I agreed to anything," he laughs. He watches your expression fall with sick satisfaction, enjoying every second of this. "Right now you''re thinking of tattling on the big, bad crooked police officer, but let me tell you: no one is going believe a whore like you. And once you point the finger at a cop, you''re going have the whole station after you, so it''s best, for once, that you keep your mouth shut and just accept what''s going to happen."'
 		*nl
-		'"Yeah, you did... before I agreed to anything," he laughs. He watches your expression fall with sick satisfaction, enjoying every second of this. "I know right now you''re thinking you''re gonna tattle on the big, bad crooked police officer, but let me tell you: no one is gonna believe a whore like you. And once you point the finger at a cop, you''re gonna have the whole station after you, so it''s best, for once, you keep your lips shut and just accept what''s going to happen."'
-		*nl
-		'It feels like the ground is spinning beneath you! You never expected such a downright cruel reaction, and he''s right. There''s nothing you can do except accept your fate.'
+		'It feels like the ground is spinning beneath you. You never expected such a downright cruel reaction, and he''s right. There''s nothing you can do except accept your fate.'
 		'Nearly in tears, you hold out your wrists and let him cuff and shove you in the back of his unmarked police car to be dropped off at the station.'
 
 		act 'Drive to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'prst'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/police.jpg"></center>'
-		*nl
-		'He chuckles and shakes his head. "C''mon, you have something better to offer me, don''t you?" His eyes roam over your body slowly, taking in every curve and exposed bit of skin with a hungry look.'
-		*nl
+		'He chuckles and shakes his head. "Come on, you have something better to offer me, don''t you?" His eyes roam over your body slowly, taking in every curve and exposed bit of skin with a hungry look.'
 		'You know exactly what he wants, but you hesitate. There''s horror stories among other prostitutes about girls who have given sexual favors to an officer to get out of being arrested, only to end up being the plaything for every cop in the district. Passed around, treated like their personal cum dump. When it''s the cops hurting you, who can you turn to for help?'
 		'"Please, isn''t this enough?" you ask weakly, but the officer scoffs.'
-		*nl
 		'"Listen, I can either take you to jail or I can fuck you and let you go. Those are your only two options, so take it or leave it," he tells you. As you stand there, his hand moves to the front of his jeans to squeeze his growing erection with a grin.'
 
 		act 'Agree': gt 'street_walker', 'policesub1'
@@ -746,22 +727,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policesub1':
 	gs 'pain', 4, 'nipples', 'pinch'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/policesub.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"Alright... if that''s what it takes," you say reluctantly. You''re barely given a chance to put away the money before he''s pulling you to a dark, secluded area between two buildings. In the darkness, you can''t make out anything he''s doing. "Um, lets make this qui-" Your words are cut off as you''re shoved against the cold, hard brick wall of one of the buildings. You can only whimper as the officer presses his body against you.'
-	*nl
-	'"Shut up, slut," he breathes into your ear. "I''ll do what I want with you." Using one arm, he hooks it under both of yours and forces them behind your back while his free hand roughly kneads your breast. Violently, he yanks down your top to expose your breasts to the cool air, and naturally your nipples begin to stiffen, something he takes as a sign that you''re enjoying yourself. "Such a dirty little whore..." He punctuates his sentence by taking your nipples between his fingers and pinching down hard.'
+	'"Alright. If that''s what it takes..." you say reluctantly. You''re barely given a chance to put away the money before he''s pulling you to a dark, secluded area between two buildings. In the darkness, you can''t make out anything he''s doing. "Um, let''s make this qui-" Your words are cut off as you''re shoved against the cold, hard brick wall of one of the buildings. You can only whimper as the officer presses his body against you.'
+	'"Shut up, slut," he breathes into your ear. "I''ll do what I want with you." He uses one hand to force your arms behind your back while his free hand roughly kneads your breast. He then violently yanks down your top, exposing your breasts to the cold air and causing your nipples to stiffen, something he takes as a sign that you''re enjoying yourself. "Such a dirty little whore..." He punctuates his sentence by taking your nipples between his fingers and pinching down hard.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'prostitution', 'rough'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	act 'Beg him to be gentler':
 		*clr & cla
-		gs 'pain', 5, 'vaginal', 'tear'
 		'"Ah! Please, not so rough..." you beg, but it goes unheard. He continues to pinch and twist your nipples until they''re left red and tender. When he releases your arms, you collapse against the wall with a sigh of relief. You can''t see it, but you definitely hear the crinkle of a condom wrapper. At least he''s using protection.'
-		'Tugging and pulling at your clothes until your pussy is exposed, he plunges two fingers inside and spreads them a few times before removing them. "Bend over, slut," he orders, and you obey quickly. You feel the tip of his rubbered cock for only a moment before he thrusts forward, the entire length of his member driven into you in one go. It''s uncomfortable to say the least, but you bite your lip to stifle a pained whimper. He drives his dick into you without pause or care for you over and over.'
-		*nl
-		'"I''m about to cum...!" You hear him groan, and soon after, he''s pressing balls deep inside you, his cock twitching as he fills the condom. He pulls out slow, and you''re left feeling raw and numb.'
-		*nl
-		'As you readjust your clothes, you see him tie up the used condom, but rather than toss it, he puts it back in the wrapper. He''s not stupid, he''s not going to leave any DNA evidence behind. "Alright, a deal''s a deal. You''re free to go," he tells you as he zips up his pants. As you make your way back to the street, you think you hear him say the boys will enjoy playing with you...'
-
+		'Tugging and pulling at your clothes until your pussy is exposed, he plunges two fingers inside and spreads them a few times before removing them. "Bend over, slut," he orders, and you quickly obey. You feel the tip of his rubbered cock thrusting forward, the entire length of his member driven into you in one go. It''s uncomfortable to say the least, but you bite your lip to stifle a pained whimper. He drives his dick into you without pause or care for you over and over.'
+		'"I''m about to cum!" you hear him groan, and soon after, he''s pressing balls deep inside you, his cock twitching as he fills the condom. He pulls out slow, and you''re left feeling raw and numb.'
+		'As you re-adjust your clothes, you see him tie up the used condom, but rather than toss it, he puts it back in the wrapper. He''s not stupid enough to leave any DNA evidence behind. "Alright, a deal''s a deal. You''re free to go," he tells you as he zips up his pants. As you make your way back to the street, you think you hear him say the boys will enjoy playing with you...'
+		gs 'pain', 5, 'vaginal', 'tear'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 10, 'rough', 'sub', 'prostitute'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'rough', 'sub', 'prostitute'
 		minut -= 10
@@ -777,13 +754,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'policesub2':
 	gs 'pain', 5, 'vaginal', 'tear'
 	gs 'pain', 2, 'twist', 'pinch'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/streetwalker/sex/policesub2.jpg"></center>'
-	*nl
-	'"Right... I understand..." you answer weakly as his grin widens. Leading you to a quiet and secluded area, he wastes no time hiking your dress up and shoving his knee between your legs to spread them. Careless and rough, his fingers dig into the soft flesh of your breasts as he gropes them. You don''t do much except stand there, absently looking upward to the sky as you try your best to focus your attention on anything but this.'
-	*nl
+	'"I understand..." you answer weakly as his grin widens. Leading you to a quiet and secluded area, he wastes no time hiking your dress up and shoving his knee between your legs to spread them. Careless and rough, his fingers dig into the soft flesh of your breasts as he gropes them. You absent-mindedly look upward to the sky as you try your best to focus your attention on anything but him.'
 	'"Turn around," he orders, and you obey without a word. You stick your ass out for him, and he pulls your panties down to your thighs. You hear him spit, using it as improvised lube as he smears it along his condom covered dick. In one violent thrust, he''s buried deep inside your pussy, stretching your walls and filling you completely. You wince and grit your teeth as he fucks you fast and hard. His labored breathing picks up, and with a grunt, you feel his cock throb as the condom is filled with his hot load. You stand there, bent over with him panting over you as you wait for his dick to stop twitching. Finally, he pulls out and you''re left with a dull pain between your legs.'
-	*nl
-	'"Alright," he begins while pulling the used condom off with a rubbery snap before tying it up neatly, "you can go now, whore." He snickers as he watches you pull your panties back up and readjust your clothes. Sore and humiliated, you stagger back to the streets.'
-
+	'"Alright." He pulls the used condom off with a rubbery snap before tying it up neatly. "You can go now, whore." He snickers as he watches you pull your panties back up and re-adjust your clothes. Sore and humiliated, you stagger back to the streets.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'prostitution', 'rough', 'sub'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'rough', 'sub', 'prostitute'
 	minut -= 10