[text edit] gadukino by karma1996969, Gshveyfab by Blatte

[fixes] Gshveyfab flow fixes and tweaks by Blatte

locations/Gshveyfab.qsrc

@@ -8,60 +8,61 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	*clr
 	gs'stat'
 	
-	'<center><B>TEXTILE FACTORY, "PARIS COMMUNE"</B></center>'
+	'<center><B>TEXTILE FACTORY, PARIS COMMUNE</B></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/factory/gshveyfab.jpg"></center>'
-	'The local textile factory; one of the few corporate enterprises in Pavlovsk. It makes clothing for G&M Store, which has a branch next door. Open from 8:00-20:00 Monday - Friday.'
-	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 20 and week >= 1 and week <= 5:
-		'The <a href="exec:minut += 5 & GT ''Gshveyfab'', ''enter''">entrance</a> sits behind a security checkpoint.'
+	'You''re standing in front one biggest employers in Pavlovsk, the local textile factory. It''s mostly known for making clothing for the G&M Store, which also opened up a store within the compound.'
+	'Opening hours are Monday to Friday, between 08:00 to 20:00.'
+	if hour >= 8 and hour < 20 and week >= 1 and week <= 5:
+		'Behind the security checkpoint you can see the <a href="exec:minut += 5 & GT ''Gshveyfab'', ''enter''">entrance</a> that every employee passes through.'
 	elseif hour < 8 or hour > 20 or week > 5:
 		'The factory is currently closed.' 
-		'Hours M-F:'
-		'First shift - 8:00 to 16:00.'
-		'Second shift - 16:00 to 20:00.'
+		'Opening hours are Monday through Friday:'
+		'First shift - 08:00 to 16:00'
+		'Second shift - 16:00 to 20:00'
 	end
-	if week < 6 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 20:
-		*pl 'The <a href="exec:torg = 0 & GT ''budgetclothes'',''start''">G&M Store</a> is currently open.'
+	if week < 6 and hour >= 8 and hour < 20:
+		*pl 'The local <a href="exec:torg = 0 & GT ''budgetclothes'',''start''">G&M Store</a> is currently open.'
 	else
-		*pl 'The G&M Store is currently closed. Hours are 8:00-20:00 Monday - Friday.'
+		*pl 'The local G&M Store is currently closed. Opening hours are Monday to Friday, between 08:00 to 20:00.'
 	end
 	
-	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 15:
-		*p 'A small room near the entrance is being used as a tailor shop.'
-		act 'Go to the tailor':
+	if week < 7 and hour >= 8 and hour < 15:
+		'In a smaller building right next to the factory is the local tailor shop, a service offered by the factory. Opening hours are Monday to Saturday, between 08:00 to 15:00.'
+		act 'Visit the tailor':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			minut += 5
 			gs'stat'
-			'An elderly man is inspecting finished garments fresh from the factory floor, he pulls his glasses down a little and looking over the top of them walks up to the desk.'
-			
-			'"Hello there, come to get some clothes adjusted? It''ll cost you 500 <b>₽</b> per item."'
+			'An elderly man is inspecting some repaired clothes, as you walk in, he stops and smiles gently, greeting you.'
+			'"Hello there young lady, do you want to adjust some of your clothing? It''ll cost you 500 <b>₽</b> per item."'
 
 			if money >= 500:
-				act 'Take in the clothes you are wearing (500 <b>₽</b>)':
+				act 'Leave the clothes you''re wearing (500 <b>₽</b>)':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					minut += 15
 					if CloStyle = 5 or $clothingworntype = 'exercise':
-						'What are you wasting my time for? This type of clothing does not need to be resized.'
+						'The tailor is looking irritatingly at you, "Why are you wasting my time with exercise clothing? That type of clothing does not need to be resized..."'
 					else
 						money -= 500
 						dynamic '<<$clothingworntype>>B[<<clothingwornnumber>>] = pcs_hips'
-						'You undress and give the clothes you need adjusting to the tailor, it is fifteen minutes until your clothes are ready. you redress.'
+						'You are handed a t-shirt and shorts as you undress and give the clothes to the tailor for adjustment. The tailor is fast and only takes fifteen minutes until your clothes are ready.'
+						'You are handed your clothes back and quickly get dressed. You''re pleased with the job that the tailor has done.'
 					end
 
 					act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'Gshveyfab', 'start'
 				end
 
-				act 'Take in different clothes':gt 'clothing', 'view_clothing_list', 'resize'
-				act 'Take in all the clothes':gt 'portnoi2'
+				act 'Leave your other clothes':gt 'clothing', 'view_clothing_list', 'resize'
+				act 'Leave in all your clothes':gt 'portnoi2'
 			end
 			act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'Gshveyfab', 'start'
 	
 		end
 	end
 
-	act 'Go to the residential area': minut += 15 & gt 'pavResidential'  
-	act 'Go to the high street': minut += 15 & gt 'pavCommercial'
+	act 'Head to the residential area': minut += 15 & gt 'pavResidential'  
+	act 'Head to the high street': minut += 15 & gt 'pavCommercial'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'enter':
@@ -69,26 +70,26 @@ CLOSE ALL
 	cla
 	*clr
 	gs'stat'
-	'<center><B>TEXTILE FACTORY, "PARIS COMMUNE"</B></center>'
+	'<center><B>TEXTILE FACTORY, PARIS COMMUNE</B></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/factory/gshveyfab.jpg" ></center>'
-	'The local textile factory; one of the few corporate enterprises in Pavlovsk.'
+	'You''re standing inside the building that is accommodating the biggest employer in Pavlovsk, the local textile factory.'
 	'There is a work schedule hanging on the wall:'
-	'First shift - 8:00 to 16:00.'
+	'First shift - 08:00 to 16:00.'
 	'Second shift - 16:00 to 20:00.'
-	''
-	if workFabrika = 0 and age >= 16 and age < 18:'You could apply for a <a href="exec:minut += 15 & GT ''Gshveyfab'', ''job_start''">part-time job</a> here.'
-	if work = 0 and workFabrika = 0 and age >= 18:'You could apply for a <a href="exec:minut += 15 & GT ''Gshveyfab'', ''job_start''">job</a> here.'
+	*nl
+	if workFabrika = 0 and age >= 16 and age < 18:'You can apply for a <a href="exec:minut += 15 & GT ''Gshveyfab'', ''job_start''">part-time job</a> here.'
+	if work = 0 and workFabrika = 0 and age >= 18:'You can apply for a <a href="exec:minut += 15 & GT ''Gshveyfab'', ''job_start''">full-time job</a> here.'
 	
 	if workFabrika = 1 and week >= 1 and week <= 5 and hour >= 8 and hour < 9 and age >= 18:
-		'You can start your shift now.'
+		'Your shift is starting now.'
 		act 'Start shift': gt'Gshveyfab','job'
 	end
 	if workFabrika = 1 and week >= 1 and week <= 5 and hour >= 16 and hour < 17 and age >= 16 and age < 18:
-		'You can start your shift now.'
+		'Your shift is starting now.'
 		act 'Start shift': gt'Gshveyfab','job'
 	end
 	if workFabrika = 1:
-		'You can quit your job, but early processing of your payment will cost you the wage of one shift.'
+		'You can quit your job, but quitting will lead to a deducted wage.'
 		act 'Quit job': 
 			if age >= 16 and age < 18:
 				smenaFabrika -= 1
@@ -116,37 +117,40 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'job_start':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><B>FOREMAN''S OFFICE</B></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/stepan/nachalnik.jpg" ></center>'
-	''
-	'You go to the factory foreman, Stepan Sergeyevich, and ask for a job.'
+	'You head into the factory foreman, Stepan Sergeyevich office, and ask him if there''s an available job.'
 	if age >= 16 and age < 18 and workFabrika = 0:
-		'"Sure, have a seat," he says. "Now, the work is difficult and meticulous, but doesn''t require any special knowledge. You should catch on pretty quick. Since you are not an adult yet, you can only work half-time, and the pay is 105 <b>₽</b> per hour. Once you become an adult, we can transfer you to full-time. Naturally, as this is a state-recognized company, we do require all the appropriate documentation. The main shift is on weekdays from 8:00 to 16:00, but you will be working the second shift, from 16:00 to 20:00. And if you miss more than three days of work in a single month, you will be fired. You will be paid at the end of the month and getting fired before then will forfeit any pay not yet received. So, is that okay?"'
-			act 'Take the job':
-				cla
-				minut += 10
-				work = 1
-				workFabrika = 1
-				smenaFabrika = 0
-				FabrikaProgul = 0
-
-				'You give him your documents, which he takes and then reminds you to come in on every weekday, at 16:00.'
+		'"Sure, have a seat," he says. "Now, the work is difficult and meticulous, but doesn''t require any special knowledge. You should catch on pretty quick. Since you are not an adult yet, you can only work half-time, and the pay is 105 <b>₽</b> per hour. Once you become an adult, we can transfer you to full-time. Naturally, as this is a state-recognized company, we do require all the appropriate documentation. The main shift is on weekdays from 08:00 to 16:00, but you will be working the second shift, from 16:00 to 20:00.'
+		'But beware, if you miss more than three days of work in a single month, you will be fired. You will be paid at the end of the month and getting fired before then will forfeit any pay not yet received. So, is that okay?"'
+			
+		act 'Accept the job':
+			cla
+			minut += 10
+			work = 1
+			workFabrika = 1
+			smenaFabrika = 0
+			FabrikaProgul = 0
+			'You hand him over your documents, which he takes and then reminds you to come in on every weekday, at 16:00.'
 
-				act 'Leave':gt'Gshveyfab', 'enter'
-			end	
+			act 'Leave':gt'Gshveyfab', 'enter'
+		end	
+		
 	elseif age >= 18 and workFabrika = 0:
-		'"Sure, have a seat," he says. "Now, the work is difficult and meticulous, but doesn''t require any special knowledge. You should catch on pretty quick. Naturally, as this is a state-recognized company, we do require all the appropriate documentation. The main shift is on weekdays from 8:00 to 16:00, and the pay is 105 <b>₽</b> per hour. And if you miss more than three days of work in a single month, you will be fired. You will be paid at the end of the month, and getting fired before then will forfeit any pay not yet received. So, is that okay?"'
-			act 'Take the job':
-				cla
-				minut += 10
-				work = 1
-				workFabrika = 1
-				smenaFabrika = 0
-				FabrikaProgul = 0
-
-				'You give him your documents, which he takes and then reminds you to come in on every weekday, at 8:00.'
+		'"Sure, have a seat," he says. "Now, the work is difficult and meticulous, but doesn''t require any special knowledge. You should catch on pretty quick. Naturally, as this is a state-recognized company, we do require all the appropriate documentation. The main shift is on weekdays from 08:00 to 16:00, and the pay is 105 <b>₽</b> per hour.'
+		'But beware, if you miss more than three days of work in a single month, you will be fired. You will be paid at the end of the month, and getting fired before then will forfeit any pay not yet received. So, is that okay?"'
+			
+		act 'Accept the job':
+			cla
+			minut += 10
+			work = 1
+			workFabrika = 1
+			smenaFabrika = 0
+			FabrikaProgul = 0
+			'You hand him your documents, which he takes and then reminds you to come in on every weekday, at 08:00.'
 
-				act 'Leave':gt'Gshveyfab', 'enter'
-			end  
+			act 'Leave':gt'Gshveyfab', 'enter'
+		end  
 	end
+	
 	act 'Leave':gt'Gshveyfab', 'enter'
 end
 
@@ -164,10 +168,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'job':
 		smenaFabrika += 2
 	end 
 	gs'stat'
-	'<center><B>TEXTILE FACTORY, "PARIS COMMUNE"</B></center>'
+	'<center><B>TEXTILE FACTORY, PARIS COMMUNE</B></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/factory/gshveyfab.jpg" ></center>'
-	''
-	'You work through your shift at the factory.'
+	'You work hard throughout your shift at the factory. The foreman has you running all over the factory performing all type of tasks. You barely even have time to rest during the shift.'
 
 	act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'Gshveyfab', 'start'
 end

locations/gadukino.qsrc

@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Mitka Kingpin</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/mitka.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the village you are approached by your old friend Mitka.'
+		'While walking through the village, you meet your old friend Mitka who approaches you.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt 'mitka'
 	elseif mitkaday ! daystart and mitka = 1 and hour >= 17 and hour < 20 and mitkarand = 1 and mitkaday ! daystart and npc_QW['A63'] < 13:
@@ -25,7 +25,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Mitka Kingpin</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/mitka.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the village you are approached by your old friend Mitka.'
+		'While walking through the village, you meet your old friend Mitka who approaches you.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt 'mitka'
 	else
@@ -59,13 +59,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/street_winter_night.jpg"></center>'
 			end
 		end
-		'A small village with many rickety wooden houses and even more ruins of houses. This village has seen better times.'
+		'A small village with many rickety wooden houses and even more ruins of houses. This village has certainly seen better times.'
 		if car > 0 and cardrive = 23: '<a href="exec:GS ''carF'',''start''">Your <<$car>></a> is close by.'
 		if StoryLine = 1 :
-			'Nearby are a series of small farms, on one of which <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''Gaddvor''">your grandparents</a> live.'
+			'Nearby there are several small farms, in one of which <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''Gaddvor''">your grandparents</a> live.'
 			act 'Grandparent''s house': minut += 5 & gt 'Gaddvor'
 		else
-			'Nearby are a series of small farms, on one of which <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''Gaddvor''">old couple</a> live.'
+			'Nearby there are several small farms, in one of which <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''Gaddvor''">old couple</a> live.'
 			act 'Old couple''s house': gt 'Gaddvor'
 		end
 		if npc_rel['A60'] > 0: 'Just down the road from your grandparents house is <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''MiroslavaHome'', ''start''">Mira''s</a> house.'
@@ -75,10 +75,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 			if hour >= 9 and hour <= 11:
 				'A truck from the city has come to <a href="exec: gt ''gadukino'',''collection_point''">collect</a> mushrooms and berries. Will stay around until noon.'
 			else
-				'Between 9.00 and 12.00, a truck will come to collect mushrooms and berries.'
+				'Between 09:00 and 12:00, there''s a truck waiting to collect mushrooms and berries.'
 			end
 		else
-			'It''s not the right season for mushrooms or berries. The truck which takes them in town won''t come.'
+			'It''s not the right season for mushrooms or berries. The truck which takes them to town won''t come during this season.'
 		end
 
 !MiaLoc tells us where Mira is Located
@@ -161,14 +161,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 			end
 		end
 
-		act 'Go to the river':minut += 20 & gt 'gadriver', 'start'
-		act 'Go to forest road':minut += 20 & gt'gadroad'
+		act 'Head to the river':minut += 20 & gt 'gadriver', 'start'
+		act 'Head to forest road':minut += 20 & gt'gadroad'
 !!Succubus active hunting, can only hunt successfully once a day, but can try until success
 		if (hour <= 7 or hour >= 21) and succubusQW = 5 and suchuntday ! daystart:
-			act 'Go Hunting (this can take a lot of time)': suchunt = 1 & gt 'gadukino', 'succubus_hunt'
+			act 'Go on the prowl (this can take a lot of time)': suchunt = 1 & gt 'gadukino', 'succubus_hunt'
 		end
 
-		act 'Go to the highway':minut += 30 & nroad = 10 & dirtyclothes = 0 & gt 'road'
+		act 'Head to the highway':minut += 30 & nroad = 10 & dirtyclothes = 0 & gt 'road'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -176,15 +176,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'succubus_hunt':
 	cla
 	minut += 30
 	*nl
-	'At this hour of the night, the village is only illuminated by the light of the moon. You know this will be to your advantage. No one will be able to see you coming... That is, if there were anyone out at night. You prowl the village looking for prey, but as the minutes pass, your frustration grows.'
+	'At this time of the night, the village is only illuminated by the light of the moon. You know this will be to your advantage. No one will be able to see you coming... That is, if there was anyone out at night. You prowl the village looking for prey, but as the minutes pass, your frustration grows.'
 	if rand(1,100) < 70:
 		minut += 30
 		mood -= 5
 		*nl
-		'God, this place is dull! After searching for an hour, you find no one; not even a stray cat seems to be out and about tonight. You give up reluctantly, pondering how else you are going to feed tonight.'
+		'God, this place is dull! After spending an hour searching, you find no one; not even a stray cat seems to be out and about tonight. You give up reluctantly, pondering how else you are going to feed tonight.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'gadukino'
 	else
-		'You are getting really antsy to feed, and after finding absolutely no one outside, you decide that breaking into someone''s house, risky as it is, is still better than going hungry.' 
+		'You are getting really anxious to feed, and after finding absolutely nobody outside, you decide that breaking into someone''s house, risky as it is, is still better than starving.' 
 		*nl
 		!Another rand_check here to choose the scene?
 		'You break the lock of the first house you see and go inside. You sneak around the house, looking for a meal, but there''s nobody there. This entire night is a bust... Well, since you''re here, you might as well try and see if there''s any regular food that helps with your hunger, even though you doubt it.' 
@@ -199,14 +199,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'succubus_hunt':
 			gs 'underwear', 'remove'
 			!Just took a guess at where this image might go - Adjust src accordingly
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/succubus/kitchennude.jpg"></center>'
-			'Heavy footsteps echo through the corridor, approaching the kitchen, and with nowhere to hide, you decide to strip instead. You are here to feed, after all, and if he sees you nude, surely he will forget what he is angry about.'
+			'Heavy footsteps echo through the corridor, approaching the kitchen, and with nowhere to hide, you decide to strip instead. You are here to feed, after all, and if he sees you naked, surely he will forget what he is angry about.'
 			'When the man enters the dark kitchen, his first reaction is about what you''d expect: "Who the hell are you!?"'
-			'You give him a good look at your body; according to your plan, that should be enough to calm him down. Unfortunately, he doesn''t seem to be aware of the plan, cause he is having none of it.'
+			'You let him have a good look at your body; according to your plan, that should be enough to calm him down. Unfortunately, he doesn''t seem to care about your plan, because he isn''t behaving like you expected.'
 			'"Have you been eating my food?! Get the hell out of my house!"'
 			*nl
-			'He grabs you and starts dragging you towards the door. You protest and try in vain to seduce him, wondering how anyone could resist your charms like this. Then you remember that you are stronger than him - weird how easily superhuman strength can slip your mind.' 
-			'As soon as you resist his pull, he grinds to a halt, confused by the fact that he can''t move you further. With the tables turned, you grab him and half-drag, half-throw him into his own living room where he lands on his back, stunned by the fact that this woman so easily overpowered him.'
-			'You pull his pants off and, already nude yourself, lower your pussy to his cock. He may have played the angry man, but the fact that it stands at attention soothes your bruised ego - your seduction efforts didn''t go completely unnoticed - and you plunge yourself down on top of him.'
+			'He grabs you and starts dragging you towards the door. You protest and try in vain to seduce him, wondering how anyone could resist your charms like this. Then you remember that you are stronger than him - weird how easily superhuman strength can slip off your mind.' 
+			'As soon as you resist his pull, he grinds to a halt, confused by the fact that he can''t move you further. With the tables turned, you grab him and half-drag, half-throw him into his own living room where he heavily lands on his back, surprised by the fact that this woman so easily overpowered him.'
+			'You pull his pants off and, being already nude yourself, lower your pussy to meet his cock. He may have played the angry man, but the fact that it stands at attention soothes your bruised ego - your seduction efforts didn''t go completely unnoticed - and you plunge yourself down on top of him.'
 			
 			act 'Feed on him':
 				*clr
@@ -233,17 +233,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'succubus_hunt':
 				
 				'You ride him hard, desperate to get your hungry pussy the nourishment it requires.' 
 				if scrand < succublvl:
-					'Your seduction and succubus powers were strong enough to get your victim hard, but they weren''t enough to make him forget about his situation: He is giving you hateful looks, clearly pissed about his door and food and, oh yeah, the fact you are raping him, but you simply ignore that.' 
-					'All you need is his sperm. You could care less about his happiness, and if he wants to complain about a woman like you fucking his brains out, that''s his problem. Just as you''re thinking that, your powers surge and force him to come, unloading his jizz deep into your waiting cunt.' 
+					'Your seduction and succubus powers were strong enough to get your victim hard, but they weren''t enough to make him forget about his situation: He is giving you hateful looks, clearly pissed about his door and food and, what else? oh yeah, the fact you are raping him, but you simply ignore that.' 
+					'All you need is his sperm. You couldn''t care less about his happiness, and if he wants to complain about a woman like you fucking his brains out, that''s his problem. Just as you''re thinking that, your powers surge and force him to come, unloading his jizz deep into your waiting cunt.' 
 					*nl
-					'You don''t know how long you go at it with him exactly, but after coming inside you <<$scxcum>>, and thus making you come too, he runs out of energy and falls unconscious. You lift yourself off of your passed-out plaything and head for the kitchen to collect your clothes as well as one last snack, feeling wonderfully relaxed after getting your fix.' 
+					'You don''t know how long you go at it with him exactly, but after coming inside you <<$scxcum>>, and thus making you come too, he runs out of energy and falls unconscious. You lift yourself off your passed-out plaything and head for the kitchen to collect your clothes as well as one last snack, feeling wonderfully relaxed after getting your "meal".' 
 					'Then you head out the back door, making sure to break the handle on the way out - you''re nothing if not consistent.'
 				else
 					'He was resisting you initially, but after a while, your powers break any resistance he had in him. By the time his first orgasm hits and he shoots his sperm into your needy cunt, he would have betrayed his own mother, much less broken his front door and laid his fridge at your feet, just to be inside you a little longer.'
-					'However unsavory the first few minutes of your meeting, this state of bliss you share with him pushes that memory in the far back of your minds and lets both of you enjoy the hard ride you''re giving him.'
+					'However unsavory the first few minutes of your meeting, this state of bliss you share with him pushes that memory in the far back of your mind and lets both of you enjoy the hard ride you''re giving him.'
 					*nl
-					'You don''t know how long you go at it with him exactly, but after coming inside you <<$scxcum>>, and thus making you come too, he runs out of energy and falls unconscious. You lift yourself off of your passed-out plaything, patting his head affectionately, and head for the kitchen to collect your clothes as well as one last snack, feeling wonderfully relaxed after getting your fix. There''s nothing better than sex with a willing subject.'
-					'Then you head out the back door. For a split second, you consider breaking that door too... but why add insult to injury when he has pleased you so?'
+					'You don''t know how long you go at it with him exactly, but after coming inside you <<$scxcum>>, and thus making you come too, he runs out of energy and falls unconscious. You lift yourself off your passed-out plaything, patting his head affectionately, and head for the kitchen to collect your clothes as well as one last snack, feeling wonderfully relaxed after getting your "meal". There''s nothing better than sex with a willing subject.'
+					'Then you head out the back door. For a split second, you consider breaking that door too... but why add insult to injury when he has pleased you so much?'
 				end
 				killvar 'scfeed' & killvar 'scrand'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -261,13 +261,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/meadow/trail_meadow.jpg"></center>'
 	'Walking around the village you see a small path that leads between neighbor''s houses, the path leads away from the village into a dense thicket...'
 
-	act 'Follow the path to see where it goes':
+	act 'Follow the path to see where it leads':
 		*clr & cla
 		meadow = 1
 		minut += 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/meadow/meadow_thicket.jpg"></center>'
-		'You follow the path to see where it goes, but about ten minutes later the path disappears into a very dense thicket if bushes and trees.'
+		'You follow the path to see where it leads, but about ten minutes later the path disappears into a very dense thicket of bushes and trees.'
 
 		act 'Look for a way around':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -310,15 +310,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 	if npc_rel['A60'] = 0:
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/miroslava.jpg"></center>'
-		'Walking around the village you notice unfamiliar young girl around your own age, she is pulling on a rope attached to the collar on a small calf. The calf grunts with displeasure, shakes her head and refuses to move any further.'
+		'Walking around the village you notice an unfamiliar young girl around your own age, she is pulling on a rope attached to the collar on a small calf. The calf grunts with displeasure, shakes its head and refuses to move any further.'
 		act 'Help':
 			*clr & cla
 			npc_rel['A60'] = 1
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mira.jpg"></center>'
-			'You decide to lend a hand to help the girl with the calf. Your lonely in the village, maybe this girl, if you get to know her, could make it seem to the other villagers that you are not a complete stranger in Gadukino. You walk over to the girl and introduce yourself and ask if she wants help. She nods and resumes pulling on the rope, while you walk over behind the calf and give it a load slap on the rump. The calf is surprised and immediately to moves forward away from you. The girl smiles in thanks and tells you her name is Miroslava.'
-			'Together you are able to guide the calf back into its pen. Miroslava turns out to be quite a sociable girl and conversationalist. You learn that her family was recently forced to move to the village from the city. Her father''s huge gambling debts to some questionable men forced him to eventually sell the family''s property in the city to pay them back. Mira is having a rough time adjusting to the life in a small village. She misses the apartment in the center of the city and the money to buy nice dresses and makeup with. After selling everything and paying off the debt, her father was told to leave the city "or else...", so they were destitute and could only afford to buy a house in this seedy dust covered village. You walk with her and chat until you reach her house, which is only a few away from your grandparent''s place. Mira invites you to come and visit her at any time. She is just as bored in the village as you are.'
+			'You decide to lend a hand to the girl with the calf. Your lonely in the village, maybe this girl, if you get to know her, could make it seem to the other villagers that you are not a complete stranger in Gadukino. You walk over to the girl and introduce yourself asking if she needs help. She nods and resumes pulling on the rope, while you walk over behind the calf and give it a loud slap on the rump. The calf is surprised and immediately moves forward, away from you. The girl gives you a thankful smile and tells you her name is Miroslava.'
+			'Together you are able to guide the calf back to its pen. Mira turns out to be quite a sociable girl and a chatterbox. You learn that her family was recently forced to move to the village from the city. Her father''s huge gambling debts to some questionable individuals forced him to eventually sell the family''s property in the city to pay them back. Mira is having a rough time getting used to the life in a small village. She misses the apartment in the center of the city and the money to buy nice dresses and makeup with. After selling everything and paying off the debt, her father was told to leave the city "or else...", so they were broke and could only afford to buy a house in this battered dust covered village. You walk with her and chat until you reach her house, which is only a little away from your grandparent''s place. Mira invites you to come and visit her at any time. She is just as bored in the village as you are.'
 
 			act 'Finish': gt 'gadukino'
 		end
@@ -334,7 +334,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mira4.jpg"></center>'
 		end
-		'You meet Miroslava, who is heading to the river to get some water, seeing you she decides to stop and chat with you for a few minutes.'
+		'You meet Mira, who is heading to the river to get some water, seeing you she decides to stop and chat with you for a few minutes.'
 		if npc_QW['A60'] >= 20:
 			act 'You''re feeling naughty':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -348,10 +348,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 						'You ask Mira to show you her pussy. She smiles casually and rests her hands on the bench, giving you a view of her bare pussy. She isn''t wearing any panties.'
 					elseif temp < 25:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirasp1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You ask Mira to show you her pussy. She smiles casually and sits down on the fence and slightly spreading his legs, showing you her bare naked pussy. She isn''t waering any panties.'
+						'You ask Mira to show you her pussy. She smiles casually and sits down on the fence and slightly spreading his legs, showing you her bare naked pussy. She isn''t wearing any panties.'
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirasp5.jpg"></center>'
-						'You ask Mira to show you her pussy. She smiles casually and getting on her hand and knees on the bench. She quickly glancing around and quickly pulls up her skirt and arched her back, showing you her naked pussy. Hold on a sec, she isn''t wearing any panties'
+						'You ask Mira to show you her pussy. She smiles casually and getting on her hand and knees on the bench. She quickly glances around, quickly pulls up her skirt and arched her back, showing you her naked pussy. Hold on a sec, she isn''t wearing any panties'
 					end
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'lesbian'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -365,7 +365,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 					temp = RAND(0,30)
 					if temp < 5:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirasp3.jpg"></center>'
-						'You ask Mira to show you her pussy. She smiles casually and sits down on a nearby fence. Mira glances around and spreads her legs... You are surprised to see, she isn''t wearing panties and gaping pussy is oozing cum. She must have just been fucked.'
+						'You ask Mira to show you her pussy. She smiles casually and sits down on a nearby fence. Mira glances around and spreads her legs... You are surprised to see, she isn''t wearing panties and her gaping pussy is oozing cum. She must have just been fucked.'
 						'"Who did that to you?" you ask her. Mira just smiles devilishly and tells you that it''s a secret.'
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirasp4.jpg"></center>'
@@ -389,7 +389,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 		minut += 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mira2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You meet Miroslava and her little calf. You both pause and start laughing, remembering how you first met.'
+		'You meet Mira and her little calf. You both pause and start laughing, remembering how you first met.'
 
 		act 'Finish': gt 'gadukino'
 	elseif npc_rel['A60'] > 0 and npc_QW['A60'] >= 4 and mirasextimes >= 10 and temper >= 12 and sunWeather = 1 and temp < 7:
@@ -402,10 +402,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 			act 'Watch':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad1.jpg"></center>'
-				'A couple of times you think, she''s about to notice you watching, but she never does, continuing to suck Mitka''s cock. Finally, he tilts his head back and Mira, quickly seeing this takes his dick in hand and directs it into in her mouth, taking a mouth full of sperm. She greedily swallowing it all, and she licks Mitka''s cock clean before tucking it back into his pants. You see she is about to rise from her knees, so you hastily depart.'
+				'A couple of times you think, she''s about to notice you watching, but she never does, continuing to suck Mitka''s cock. Finally, he tilts his head back and Mira, seeing this, quickly takes his dick in her hand directing it towards her mouth, taking a mouth full of sperm. She greedily swallowing it all, and she licks Mitka''s cock clean before tucking it back into his pants. You see she is about to rise from her knees, so you hastily depart.'
 			end
 		else
-			'Until she finally spots you watching her. You see she blushes crimson, but she does not stop sucking, only occasionally shifts her eyes in your direction. You continue to watch as if not seeing anything unusual, as Mira''s head bobs up and down continuing to suck Mitka''s cock. Finally, he tilts his head back and Mira, quickly seeing this takes his dick in hand and directs it into in her mouth, taking a mouth full of sperm. She greedily swallowing it all, and she licks Mitka''s cock clean before tucking it back into his pants. You smile at Mira with the most peaceful of expressions and walk away...'
+			'Until she finally spots you watching her. You see she blushes crimson, but she does not stop sucking, only occasionally shifts her eyes in your direction. You continue to watch as if not seeing anything unusual, while Mira''s head bobs up and down keeping to suck Mitka''s cock. Finally, he tilts his head back and Mira, seeing this, quickly takes his dick in hand directing it towards her mouth, taking a mouth full of sperm. She greedily swallowing it all, and she licks Mitka''s cock clean before tucking it back into his pants. You smile at Mira with the most peaceful of expressions and walk away...'
 		end
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -418,7 +418,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 	elseif npc_rel['A60'] > 0 and npc_QW['A60'] >= 6 and mirasextimes >= 10 and temper < 18 and sunWeather = 1 and temp >= 7:
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad2.jpg"></center>'
-		'Walking through the village, you happen to notice Mira fucking Mitka. Mitka slowly grinded his cock deep into Mira''s pussy. You see Mira shudder under him as she climaxed. She moaned and raked his back with her fingernails as she squirted and continued to cum. Mitka increased his pace and started to roughly hammer his cock into her dripping pussy. With his left hand he reached for Mira''s right tit and started to squeeze it without mercy. Mira just grunts and laughs.'
+		'Walking through the village, you happen to notice Mira fucking Mitka. Mitka slowly grinded his cock deep into Mira''s pussy. You see Mira shudder under him as she climaxes. She moans and scratches his back with her fingernails as she squirts and continues to cum. Mitka increases his pace and starts to roughly hammer his cock into her dripping pussy. With his left hand he reached for Mira''s right tit and starts to squeeze it without mercy. Mira just grunts and laughs.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Watch':
@@ -426,14 +426,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 				*clr & delact 'Watch'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad3.jpg"></center>'
-				'They are so absorbed in fucking each other senseless that they ignoring everything else, so decide to quietly continue to watch. Within a few minutes you see Mitka begin to pick up the pace and he started to drive his cock faster and faster into Mira''s pussy until he grunts like a pig and dumps a huge load of cum into Mira''s pussy which is again squirting. After a few minutes of them just laying together holding each other and gasping for breath, they slowly begin to kiss and laugh as they freshen up. You smile and rub your own dripping snatch before moving away.'
+				'They are so absorbed in fucking each other senseless that they are ignoring everything else, so you decide to quietly continue to watch. Within a few minutes you see Mitka begin to pick up the pace and he starts to drive his cock faster and faster into Mira''s pussy until he grunts like a pig and dumps a huge load of cum into Mira''s pussy which is again squirting. After a few minutes of just laying together holding each other and gasping for breath, they slowly begin to kiss and laugh as they freshen up. You smile and rub your own dripping snatch before moving away.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'stat'
 			else
 				*clr & delact 'Watch'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad3.jpg"></center>'
-				'They are so absorbed in fucking each other senseless that they ignoring everything else, so you decide to quietly continue to watch. You see Mitka pull his cock out of Mira''s dripping pussy and he drives it deep into her ass, barebacked. Mira let''s out a short scream of protest as Mitka continues to drive his cock into her asshole until his pubs rub up against her ass. Mira writhes under his brutal onslaught. After only a few minutes, Mitka starts to slap her ass leaving a bright red mark. Mitka begins to stutter in his thrusts into her ass. Finally, Mitka leans back with his dick still embedded balls deep in Mira''s asshole and lets out a bestial growl as he begins to cum...'
+				'They are so absorbed in fucking each other senseless that they are ignoring everything else, so you decide to quietly continue to watch. You see Mitka pull his cock out of Mira''s dripping pussy and driving it deep into her ass, without any preparation. Mira lets out a short scream of protest as Mitka continues to drive his cock into her asshole until his pubes rub up against her ass. Mira writhes under his brutal onslaught. After only a few minutes, Mitka starts to slap her ass leaving bright red marks on it. Mitka begins to falter in his thrusts into her ass. Finally, Mitka leans back with his dick still embedded balls deep in Mira''s asshole and lets out a bestial growl as he begins to cum...'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'stat'
 			end
@@ -446,14 +446,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 	else
 		'<center><h2>Village Gadukino</h2></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/walk.jpg"></center>'
-		'You kill time, walking through the village.'
+		'To kill time, you take a walk through the village.'
 		act 'Leave':gt 'gadukino'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/miraqw7.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you notice Miroslava, digging in her vegetable garden. She stands with her ass high in the air, and to your amazement, she isn''t wearing panties. You get a good look at her pussy lips...'
+	'Walking through the village, you notice Mira, digging in her vegetable garden. She stands with her ass high in the air, and to your amazement, she isn''t wearing panties. You get a good look at her pussy lips...'
 
 	act 'You approach slowly':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -472,11 +472,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 		elseif npc_QW['A60'] >= 20:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mira3,<<rand(0,3)>>.jpg"></center>'
 		end
-		'You quietly sneak up to her, but she notices your approach and turns around, her hands pull her skirt back into place, blushing. You stare at her for a few seconds silently, and then ask, "Why don''t you have any panties on?" Miroslava, her eyes darting about, shifting her weight from foot to foot, explaining hesitantly, "Well what happened is, well it''s very hot and I thought it would feel better without panties." You interrupt her with an upraised hand as you get an idea for your second wish... You remind her she still owes you wishes and you''re ready to collect your second wish. You tell Mira to sit down. Miroslava reluctantly agrees, and when is finally sitting on the ground, you order her to show you her pussy, you are thinking fast of other punishments for her. Mira grumbles incoherently and glares at you, but eventually sighs and slowly lifts up her skirt, giving you a good look at my crotch.'
+		'You quietly sneak up to her, but she notices your approach and turns around, her hands pull her skirt back into place, blushing. You stare at her for a few seconds silently, and then ask, "Why don''t you have any panties on?" Mira, her eyes darting around, shifting her weight from foot to foot, explains hesitantly, "Well what happened is, well it''s very hot and I thought it would feel better without panties." You interrupt her with an upraised hand as you get an idea for your second wish... You remind her she still owes you wishes and tell you''re ready to collect your second wish.'
+		'You tell Mira to sit down. Mira reluctantly agrees, and when is finally sitting on the ground, you order her to show you her pussy, you are thinking fast of other punishments for her. Mira grumbles incoherently and glares at you, but eventually sighs and slowly lifts up her skirt, giving you a good look at her crotch.'
 		act 'Watch':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirawish2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You enjoy the view, then snap your fingers as a wicked idea comes to mind for your second wish. Mira says sadly, that she thought you had come up with your second wish. You ask if she is thinking about backing out of granting your wishes, but Mira says no, she will go through with them. You smile wickedly and tell her to follow you.'
+			'You enjoy the view, then snap your fingers as a wicked idea comes to mind for your second wish. Mira says sadly, that she thinks you just came up with your second wish. You ask if she is thinking about backing out of granting your wishes, but Mira says no, she will go through with them. You smile wickedly and tell her to follow you.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 2, 'exhibitionism', 'lesbian', 'dom'
 			gs 'stat'
 
@@ -485,7 +486,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 				minut += 45
 				pcs_dom += RAND(0,2)
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirawish2_1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You lead her out to the main road. You tell Miroslava, that she is to pose as a prostitute and attempt to get a customer or two. This is your second wish. You want Mira to become a prostitute and fulfil the desires of anyone who asks for her services. Mira looks shocked but nods that she will do it, Mira looks around the area and seeing the street was quiet, fulfills your desire...'
+				'You lead her out to the main road. You tell Mira, that she is to pose as a prostitute and attempt to get a customer or two. This is your second wish. You want Mira to become a prostitute and fulfill the desires of anyone who asks for her services. Mira looks shocked but nods that she will do it, Mira looks around the area and seeing the street was quiet, fulfills your desire...'
 				gs 'stat'
 
 				act 'Watch her perform a trick...':
@@ -502,7 +503,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 10
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/miraprost.jpg"></center>'
-						'You can''t hear what she is saying but after only a few minutes the door opens and Mira steps into the vehicle. It pulls away, but doesn''t go far. You see it pull off the main road and head down a dirt road. Smiling and wanting to see the action, you run into the woods trying to head off the vehicle.'
+						'You can''t hear what she is saying but after only a few minutes the door opens and Mira steps into the vehicle. It pulls away, but doesn''t go far. You see it pull off the main road and head down a dirt road. Smiling and wanting to see the action, you run into the woods trying to head off to the vehicle.'
 						gs 'stat'
 
 						act 'Continue':
@@ -532,7 +533,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 											*clr & cla
 											minut += 10
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/miramoney.jpg"></center>'
-											'Mira walks back towards town counting the money he gave her as she absentmindedly licks the cum as it drips down her face. She smiles at you and shows you the money as you join her.'
+											'Mira walks back towards town counting the money he gave her as she absentmindedly licking the cum as it drips down her face. She smiles at you and shows you the money as you join her.'
 											gs 'arousal', 'end'
 											gs 'stat'
 
@@ -551,7 +552,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 								act 'Continue':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/miraprost2_1.mp4"></video></center>'
-									'Mira and her John jump into the back of the van and you watch as he starts fucking her wet pussy. His hand covers her mouth as she screams in ecstasy. The guy pounds his 20cm cock deep into her pussy. From Mira''s grunts of partial ecstasy, partial pain, you know the John is hitting or entering her cervix.'
+									'Mira and her John jump into the back of the van and you watch as he starts fucking her wet pussy. His hand covers her mouth as she screams in ecstasy. The guy heavily pounds her pussy with his 20cm cock. From Mira''s grunts of a mix of ecstasy and pain, you know the John is reaching or entering her cervix.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 10, 'exhibitionism', 'prostitution'
 									gs 'stat'
 
@@ -566,7 +567,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 											*clr & cla
 											minut += 10
 											'<left><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/mira/miracumpump.mp4"></video></left>''<right><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/gadukino/sex/mira/miracumdump.mp4"></video></right>'
-											'After the wild sex, Mira and the John sit in the van and talk for a bit. He gives her a nice wad of cash and she starts walking to the village. Seeing you, she smiles and says thanks.'
+											'After the wild sex, Mira and the John sit in the van and talk for a bit. He gives her a nice wad of cash and she starts walking to the village. Seeing you, she smiles and thanks you.'
 											gs 'arousal', 'end'
 											gs 'stat'
 
@@ -586,7 +587,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad5.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you notice that behind a shed Vasya and Mira are having sex. Mira moans as she rides his cock and it seems as if she''s oblivious to Mira around her. But you''re not sure you can say the same about Vasya... So, you decide not to risk being caught peeking and leave the couple alone.'
+	'Walking through the village, you notice that behind a shed Vasya and Mira are having sex. Mira moans as she rides his cock and it seems as if she''s oblivious to everything around her. But you''re not sure you can say the same about Vasya... So, you decide not to risk being caught peeking and leave the couple alone.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -597,7 +598,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad6.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you notice that behind a shed Vasya and Mira are having sex. Mira moans as she rides his cock and it seems as if she''s oblivious to Mira around her. But you''re not sure you can say the same about Vasya... So, you decide not to risk being caught peeking and leave the couple alone.'
+	'Walking through the village, you notice that behind a shed Vasya and Mira are having sex. Mira moans as she rides his cock and it seems as if she''s oblivious to everything around her. But you''re not sure you can say the same about Vasya... So, you decide not to risk being caught peeking and leave the couple alone.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -608,7 +609,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '6':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad7.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you notice Kolambu and Mira hiding behind some bushes. She''s squatting before him, passionately smacking her lips on his cock...'
+	'Walking through the village, you notice Kolyamba and Mira hiding behind some bushes. She''s squatting before him, passionately smacking her lips on his cock...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -619,7 +620,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '7':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad8.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you notice behind the bushes Kolambu with Vasya and Mira. That is to see you butt naked on all fours and take turns sucking boys members...'
+	'Walking through the village, you notice Kolyamba with Vasya and Mira behind the bushes. She''s butt naked on all fours and is eagerly sucking off the guys in turn...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -630,7 +631,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '8':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirahorny.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you see Mira. She sits on the fence and constantly looking intensely RUB yourself pussy, when no one is watching...'
+	'Walking through the village, you see Mira. She sits on the fence and constantly looking nervously around while intensely playing with her pussy, when no one is watching...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -641,7 +642,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '9':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/sex/mirasexgad9.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you notice Mira behind fences with Kolyamba. She squirms and moans, but dutifully peddles her bare butt Kolyamba, trying to shove in her bottle...'
+	'Walking through the village, you notice Mira trying to hide behind a fence with Kolyamba. She squirms and moans, but dutifully opens her bare ass for Kolyamba as he''s trying to shove a bottle into it...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -652,7 +653,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '10':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirasexgad10.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you see Mira, facing Mitka with his pants down and sticking his fingers Cebu anus, shows him prolapsed ass...'
+	'Walking through the village, you spot Mira and Mitka hidden between two buildings. Mira is bent over slightly, baring her ass to him as he probes her hole with his fingers, revealing her prolapsed anus to him.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -663,7 +664,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '11':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/village/mira/mirasexgad11.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you meet Mira, which corrects the shoes. However, she without panties and with her pussy white thread sticking out of a tampon...'
+	'Walking through the village, you meet Mira, after a while you''ve been chatting she bends over to fix her shoes. You can clearly notice that she''s not wearing any panties, you get a full view of her bare pussy...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -675,7 +676,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '12':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/gadlol.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you see two grandmas, sawing boards...'
+	'Walking through the village, you see two grandmas, sawing wood, preparing for the winter...'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	act 'Leave': gt 'gadukino'
@@ -685,7 +686,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '13':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/gadlol1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you see two thieving grannies, load-bearing boards with dilapidated farm...'
+	'Walking through the village, you see two thieving grannies hastily making their way down the street, having stole bundles of wooden boards from an old run down building.'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	act 'Leave': gt 'gadukino'
@@ -696,21 +697,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '14':
 	minut += 5
 	if temper >= 15:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/gadlol3.jpg"></center>'
-		'Walking through the village, you see local elite. They kindly smile in your face, and as soon as you pass by, immediately start whispering among themselves...'
+		'Walking through the village, you come across the elderly gang. As you pass them, they kindly smile at you, but you know as soon as you pass by, they''ll immediately start gossiping among themselves...'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/gadlol2.jpg"></center>'
-		'Walking through the village, you see local elite. They, as if on command, all together subside and hard where to start looking-to the side, as soon as you approach him...'
+		'Walking through the village, you come across the elderly gang. As soon as you approach them, they all turn their back to you as they all pretentiously look away, not wanting to interact with you...'
 	end
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	act 'Pass by': gt 'gadukino'
+	act 'Continue on': gt 'gadukino'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = '15':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/gadlol4.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the village, you see the younger generation. They happily smile at you...'
+	'Walking through the village, a group of young boys, looking no older than 13 or 14, are playing in the road. Two of the older boys sit on an old, beat up dirt bike. You''re not even sure it even works, but the kids are having fun playing on it nonetheless.'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	act 'Leave': gt 'gadukino'
@@ -720,7 +721,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '16':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><h2>Village Gadukino</h2></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/walk.jpg"></center>'
-	'You kill time, walking through the village.'
+	'Wanting to kill time, you decide on taking a stroll throughout the village.'
 
 	act 'Leave': gt 'gadukino'
 end
@@ -729,29 +730,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'collection_point':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
-
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/collection_point.jpg"></center>'
-	'Mobile procurement vehicle for local mushrooms and berries.'
+	'Parked half way off the road is an old, unmarked truck. The back doors are held open and found inside is usually a farmer looking to buy any mushrooms locals find while out in the nearby woods. Some find it odd that they''re operating out of a truck, but you imagine it''s cheaper to maintain than a shop and it lets them get around to other villages like yours to buy their mushrooms, too.'
 
 	if boletus > 0:
-		act'sell mushrooms':
+		act'Sell your mushrooms':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 30
 			money += boletus*150
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/collection_point.jpg"></center>'
-			'You sale your mushrooms for <b><<boletus*150>></b> rubles.'
+			'You decide to sell your mushrooms for <<boletus*150>> <b>₽</b>.'
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			act'Further':boletus = 0 & gt 'gadukino','collection_point'
 		end
 	end
 	if bilberry > 0:
-		act'sell berries':
+		act'Sell your berries':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 30
 			money += bilberry*75
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/collection_point.jpg"></center>'
-			'You sale your berries for <b><<bilberry*75>></b> rubles.'
+			'You decide to your berries for <<bilberry*75>> <b>₽</b>.'
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			act'Further':bilberry = 0 & gt 'gadukino','collection_point'