[text edit] by akossi

locations/gschool_socialchg.qsrc

@@ -1597,7 +1597,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gopnik slut':
 									act 'The boys':
 										cla & *clr
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/oldschool/gophangout/slut/8.jpg"></center>'
-										'Once they get bored taking picture, a couple of the guys come over and start fondling your naked body. One of them pinches your nipple hard. Soon the guys are taking turns fingering your pussy roughly, squeezing your tits and pinching your nipples. After awhile you''ve lost track of how many guys have manhandled you.'
+										'Once they get bored taking your picture, a couple of the guys come over and start fondling your naked body. One of them pinches your nipple hard. Soon the guys are taking turns fingering your pussy roughly, squeezing your tits and pinching your nipples. After awhile you''ve lost track of how many guys have manhandled you.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 5, 'group', 'rough', 'sub', 'humiliation', 'exhibitionism'
 										gs 'pain', 5, 'nipples', 'pinch'
 										gs 'stat'

locations/park.qsrc

@@ -722,7 +722,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rape1':
 	SUB += 3
 	money = 0
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/centralpark/sex/rape.jpg"></center>'
-	'Suddenly, you are hit on the head. You wake up sometime later in a bush. Somehow you''re not able to move your arms, they must be tied up. As you look down on yourself, you realize, that you''re not wearing anything and before you can even react some dude is ramming his dick into your cunt. "Shit", you think yourself, "I''m being raped."'
+	'Suddenly, you are hit on the head. You wake up sometime later in a bush. Somehow you''re not able to move your arms, they must be tied up. As you look down at yourself, you realize that you''re not wearing anything and before you can even react some dude is ramming his dick into your cunt. "Shit", you think yourself, "I''m being raped."'
 	gs 'arousal', 5, 'vaginal', 'rape'
 
 	act 'Try to resist':

locations/shulga_room.qsrc

@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'You walk into the room and the boys smile at you. "Well look who it is. <<$pcs_nickname>>, our own personal fuck slut. Isn''t that right slut?"'
 			'You nod your head yes, knowing you have no choice but to obey. "Yes I''m your fuck slut."'
-			'Laughing they look to each other. "Damn if we don''t have the bitch well trained." Then they look back to you. "So... Take off your clothes,then, and come on over here, like the good little slut we know you are."'
+			'Laughing, they look to each other. "Damn if we don''t have the bitch well trained." Then they look back to you. "So... take off your clothes then and come on over here, like the good little slut we know you are."'
 			'You walk over to them taking off your clothes.'
 			act 'Serve them': gt 'shulga_room', 'gang_sex_room_ev1_2'
 		exit