Proofreading and hornguy's addition to Albina chat.

locations/abduction.qsrc

@@ -10,7 +10,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	menu_off = 1
 	i = rand(1, 2)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/girltocar<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'You suddenly hear what sounds like someone coming up to you from behind, but before you can turn and look, you feel something hit your head hard. You stumble as your vision goes black...'
+	'You suddenly hear what sounds like someone rushing up behind you, but before you can turn and look, you feel something hit your head hard. You stumble as your vision goes black...'
 	act 'Pass out':gt 'abduction', 'abdCarTrunk'
 end
 
@@ -18,16 +18,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCarTrunk':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/trunkint1.jpg"></center>'
 	'You wake up in a very tight, dark place. You quickly realize that you''re in the trunk of a moving car.'
-	'You try to kick the walls with your feet, but after a while you can see it''s pointless.'
+	'You try to kick the walls with your feet, but after a while you can see that it''s pointless.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoomFirstEntry'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRoomFirstEntry':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/downstairs1.jpg"></center>'
-	'The car stops and you hear the sound of someone walking outside. Suddenly... the trunk opens up.'
+	'The car stops and you hear the sound of someone walking outside before the trunk opens up.'
 	'Before your eyes adjust to the bright flow of daylight, you''re hoisted up by a strong man and carried into a house.'
-	'He''s carrying you downstairs.'
+	'He carries you downstairs into the basement.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoomFirstChaining'
 end
 
@@ -36,14 +36,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRoomFirstChaining':
 	i = rand(1, 5)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/shackled<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
 	'You''re thrown onto a dirty bed. The man forcibly undresses you before shackling your wrists and ankles. He then slaps a collar around your neck before chaining you to the wall.'
-	'"You must have really pissed someone off girl." he says.'
+	'"You must have really pissed the wrong person off girl," he says.'
 	'"What is this place? What are you going to do to me?" you ask.'
 	'"This is where girls are brought to be trained as sex slaves!"'
-	'"... but... how... no..."'
-	'"Shut up slut. Usually, we torture you for fun and for as long as we want. Once you break, we sell you to the highest bidder."'
-	'"You cannot do this to me! It''s illegal!'
-	'"Ha! Who do you think are our best customers? Politicians, police officers, businessmen... We have our cover, so you should shut up and get used to it!"'
-	'The man leaves without saying another word as you tearfully sob and yell for him to come back...'
+	'"... But... How... No..."'
+	'"Shut up, slut! Usually, we torture you for fun and for as long as we want. Once you break, we sell you to the highest bidder."'
+	'"You can''t do this to me! It''s illegal!"'
+	'"Ha! Who do you think our best customers are? Slimy politicians, corrupt police officers, sleazy businessmen... We have our cover, so you should shut up and get used to it!"'
+	'The man leaves without saying another word as you tearfully sob and yell for him to come back.'
 	gs 'underwear', 'remove'
 	painkiller_bak = painkiller
 	prezik_bak = prezik
@@ -88,8 +88,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRoom':
 	menu_off = 0
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/basement1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are in a dark basement that has only one window and some lights. You are chained to the wall like a dog, a collar wrapped tightly around your neck while cold metal shackles also dig painfully into your wrists and ankles.'
-	'You can only move a few meters from the wall to reach several things left for you by your abductors.'
+	'You''re in a dark basement that has only one window and some lights. You''re chained to the wall like a dog, a collar wrapped tightly around your neck while cold metal shackles dig painfully into your wrists and ankles.'
+	'You can only move a few meters from the wall to reach several things left for you by your captors.'
 
 	act 'Look around':gt 'abduction', 'abdFood'
 
@@ -107,14 +107,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSomeoneComing':
 	minut += 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/downstairs2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You hear the sounds of footsteps that get louder with every step that comes closer to you. Their sound begins at the top of the stairs.'
+	'You hear the sounds of footsteps that gradually get louder before they reach the top of the stairs.'
 
 	if pcs_leghair > 3 or pcs_pubes > 3:
 		minut += 20
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/shave1.jpg"></center>'
 		'You are forced to shave yourself.'
-		'Obviously, your captors do not fancy women with body hair.'
-		'You are watched the whole time, probably so you don''t cut your arteries or something similar.'
+		'You''re watched the whole time, probably so you don''t cut yourself or something similar.'
 		pcs_pubes = 0
 		pcs_leghair = 0
 		pcs_horny += 5
@@ -122,15 +121,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSomeoneComing':
 
 	if broken = 0 and rapeCount = 0 and tortureCount = 0 and examed = 0:
 		*nl
-		'The man comes up to you. He grabs your chain and forcibly puts a blindfold on your head to cover your eyes.'
+		'The man comes up to you. He grabs your chain and forcibly wraps a blindfold around your head to cover your eyes.'
 		'He leads you up the stairs as you feel a breath of fresh air that sensually caresses your bare skin.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExamStart'
 	else
 		if broken = 0:
-			'You fearfully back away from the man and curl up against the wall, your body trembling in fear of what is going to happen next.'
+			'You fearfully back away from the man and curl up against the wall, your body trembling in fear of what''s going to happen next.'
 			act 'Cower in fear':gt 'abduction', 'abdRape'
 			
-			if rapeCount >= 5: act 'Plead that you cannot take any more':gt 'abduction', 'abdBreak1'
+			if rapeCount >= 5: act 'Plead that you can''t take any more':gt 'abduction', 'abdBreak1'
 		else
 		
 		end
@@ -143,9 +142,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSomeoneComing':
 			painkillerChance = rand(1,100)
 			buyoutChanceRand = rand(1,100)
 			if broken < 10:
-				act 'Welcome back, Master.':gt 'abduction', 'abdBrokenAsk'
+				act 'Welcome back, Master':gt 'abduction', 'abdBrokenAsk'
 			elseif (broken >= 10 and abdTools = 0):
-				act 'Welcome back, Master.':gt 'abduction', 'abdBrokenGiveTools'
+				act 'Welcome back, Master':gt 'abduction', 'abdBrokenGiveTools'
 			else
 				if customerChance <= 50:
 					act 'Welcome back, Master':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGate'
@@ -154,7 +153,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSomeoneComing':
 					act 'Welcome back, Master':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGateBuyout'
 				else
 					if abdCustomerCount > 5 and saleChanceRand <= (2 * saleChance):
-						'Master: "I have some good news for you slave."'
+						'"I have some good news for you slave."'
 						act 'Yes Master?':gt 'abduction', 'abdBeSold'
 					else
 						if painkillerChance <= 30:
@@ -174,8 +173,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExamStart':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/examroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your blindfold is removed. You find yourself in a small room that''s painted white. The light is very bright and blinds you to the point where you can barely see.'
-	'As your eyes adjust, you can see that it is some kind of examination room. It distinctly reminds you of a gynecologist''s office.'
+	'Your blindfold is removed and you find yourself in a small room that''s painted white. The light is very bright and blinds you to the point that you can barely see.'
+	'As your eyes adjust, you see that it''s some kind of examination room. It distinctly reminds you of a gynecologist''s office.'
 	'"Sit." the man sternly orders.'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'hard'
@@ -196,11 +195,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExamResist':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/examslap.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Terrified of what they''ll do, you start yelling and clawing at your collar, trying desperately to escape.'
+	'Terrified of what they''ll do, you start screaming for help and clawing at your collar, trying desperately to escape.'
 	'However, your captor''s strength, along with your tightly adjusted cuffs, make your attempt to escape futile.'
-	'He yanks roughly on your chain, which pulls you to the ground in front of him. He slaps your face hard and leaves it stinging with a red handmark across your cheek.'
-	'"You''re only making it harder bitch!!" he yells in your face, before effortlessly picking you up and slamming you into the chair. He removes your shackles before tightly restraining you.'
-	'He then calmly sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
+	'He yanks roughly on your chain, your collar choking you as he pulls you to the ground in front of him. He slaps your face hard and leaves it stinging with a red handmark across your cheek.'
+	'"You''re only making it harder bitch!" he yells in your face before effortlessly picking you up and slamming you into the chair, winding you. He removes your shackles before tightly restraining you.'
+	'He then calmly sits down in a chair in the far corner of the room.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExam1'
 end
 
@@ -208,9 +207,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExamObey':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/examsit.jpg"></center>'
-	'Like the obdient slave you obviously have just become, you willingly climb up onto the chair and sit there. You wonder what perverse things are going to happen to you.'
+	'Like an obdient slave, you willingly climb up onto the chair as you wonder what perverse things are going to happen to you.'
 	'The man ties you up anyway, probably to make sure you don''t try to escape after they start. This makes you even more nervous. He also removes your shackles.'
-	'He then calmly sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
+	'He then calmly sits down in a chair in the far corner of the room.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExam1'
 end
 
@@ -220,22 +219,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExam1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/exam1.jpg"></center>'
 	'A man enters the room dressed like a doctor, wearing a lab coat and suit with a stethoscope around his neck. He walks as if he''s unconcerned about you.'
 	'Obviously, he doesn''t speak to you, but rather to the man sitting in the chair. "Wow, a nice catch indeed." the doctor exclaims.'
-	'The doctor puts on a pair of rubber gloves then sits down on a small chair in front of you. He looks at your spread legs and what''s between them.'
+	'The doctor puts on a pair of rubber gloves and sits down on a small chair in front of you. He looks at your spread legs and what''s between them.'
 	*nl
-	'He continues to speak to the man: "She''s about <<age>> years old."'
+	'He continues to speak to the man. "She''s about <<age>> years old."'
 	if age < 18:
-		'"Geez, you like them really young don''t you?"'
-		'"Sure Doctor, who wants to fuck some old meat? The customers just love how the young ones squeal."'
-		'"Heh, I see..."'
-		'He continues with the usual report of his findings.'
+		'"Geez, you like them young, don''t you?"'
+		'"Who wants to fuck some old meat? The customers just love how the young ones squeal." the man replies.'
+		'"Heh, I see..." He continues with the usual report of his findings.'
 	end
 	'He continues to examine every inch of you. "Regarding her usage levels:"'
-	'He shines a light in your mouth and says, "Her throat is <<$throattipe>>."'
+	'He shines a light in your mouth. "Her throat is <<$throattipe>>."'
 	'Next, he prods a finger around in your ass. "And her ass is <<$anustipe>>."'
 	'He pulls his finger out of your ass and finally reaches for your pussy.'
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
 		'"Oh, you''ll like this. Her pussy is fresh. We have a virgin here."'
-		'"Looks like we hit the jackpot once again dear Doctor." says the man with a happy smile.'
+		'"Looks like we hit the jackpot once again dear Doctor," the man replies with a happy smile.'
 	else
 		'"And her pussy is <<$vaginatipe>>.'
 	end
@@ -248,10 +246,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExam2':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/exam2.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Listen here, little slave. We will make sure that you are healthy and ready to be trained."'
+	'"Listen here, little slave. We''ll make sure that you''re healthy and ready to be trained."'
 	'He quickly injects all the solutions into one of your arms. The needle pricks your skin to hit the vein in the crook of your arm.'
 	'"The examination is now over."'
-	'The doctor leaves the room. The man puts your shackles and blindfold back on then leads you back down to the basement.'
+	'The doctor leaves the room and the man puts your shackles and blindfold back on before leading you back down to the basement.'
 	gs 'medical_din','healSTDs'
 
 	examed = 1
@@ -264,10 +262,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenGiveTools':
 	abdTools = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosbag.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your master approaches you. It looks like he is holding something big in his hands.'
-	'When he steps into the light, you can see he holds some very large dildos.'
-	'"Hello, my newly broken slave. I have a gift for you." he says.'
-	'You are rather quiet, because fearful thoughts of having these dreadfully big dildos shoved anywhere into your body make you feel like you might puke.'
+	'Your master approaches you. It looks like he''s holding something big in his hands.'
+	'When he steps into the light, you can see that he''s holding some very large dildos.'
+	'"Hello, my slave. I have a gift for you."'
+	'You remain quiet, fearful thoughts of having these dildos shoved anywhere into your body making you feel sick.'
 	'"Aren''t you glad whore? These dildos are here for you to train on, so you can perform better in a "live" situation."'
 	'"Uhmm... thank you Master."'
 	'He puts them down next to your bed and leaves without saying another word.'
@@ -275,7 +273,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenGiveTools':
 		if breastpump = 0:breastpump = 1
 		'In the bottom of the box, under the various dildos, you also find a working breast pump.'
 		if lact_engorgement > 3:
-		 'You are relieved that you can now empty your painfully full breasts'
+		 'You''re relieved that you can now empty your painfully full breasts.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
@@ -287,10 +285,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak1':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/questioned1.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Please... please! I cannot bear this treatment anymore! I''ll do anything, just let me go!" you tearfully plead.'
-	'"You don''t understand bitch. You will only leave this place in one of two ways. Either as a sex slave - or as a corpse."'
+	'"Please... please! I can''t bear this anymore! I''ll do anything, just let me go!" you tearfully plead.'
+	'"You don''t understand bitch. You only leave this place in one of two ways. Either as a sex slave - or as a corpse."'
 	'"But..."'
-	'"You will be sold to someone as their slave. If you won''t accept that role, then you will be utilized for the more perverted needs of our customers. Those girls usually don''t survive for long.'
+	'"You''ll be sold to someone as their slave. If you won''t accept that, then you will be utilized for the more perverted needs of our customers. Those girls usually don''t survive for long.'
 	'A sense of dread washes over you as your mind races to think of what horrors might await you.'
 	'"Now, show me what a good slave you are."'
 
@@ -362,7 +360,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenGivePainkillerNo':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/pill1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'You see anger flash across your master''s face. "Refusing a gift? It seems like this slave needs to be reminded of her place."'
-	'He ties you down on top of the table then secures your head. Some devious device is attached to your nose which pulls your head backwards. It forces you to open your mouth slightly.'
+	'He ties you down on top of the table and secures your head. Some devious device is attached to your nose which pulls your head backwards and forces you to open your mouth slightly.'
 	'Your master takes a clamp and pulls your tongue out. It tightly and painfully squeezes it. He then secures the pill on top of a dildo and pushes the tip down your throat.'
 	*nl
 	'Your gag reflex activates, causing you to gag and choke, but he doesn''t remove the dildo for as long as you try to throw up.'
@@ -381,7 +379,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenAsk':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	'Your master responds. "Very good. What do you want me to do to you slave?"'
+	'Your master responds. "Very good. What do you want me to do to you, slave?"'
 	
 	act 'Please fuck my mouth Master':gt 'abduction', 'abdBreak2FuckB1'
 	
@@ -399,7 +397,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckA1':
 	gs 'cum_call', '', 'Master', 0,'', spot, svol
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokena1.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your tormentor unchains you and throws you onto your dirty bed.'
-	'Spreading your legs wide apart you spit on your hand and smear it on your pussy. "Come and take me, Master."'
+	'Spreading your legs wide apart, you spit on your hand and smear it on your pussy. "Come and take me, Master."'
 	'"I like my bitches restrained!" your master says and ties your hands and feet together, securing your position.'
 	'His dick penetrates your pussy easily with the saliva doing its job.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 15, 'sub', 'bound'
@@ -419,7 +417,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckA2':
 	'After some mouthfucking and gagging, he cums in your mouth.'
 	if broken = 1:
 		*nl
-		'"Very good, slave. You are on the path to redeem yourself." Finished with you, he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location. He then leaves your room with the door closing behind him.'
+		'"Very good, slave. You''re on the path to redeeming yourself." Finished with you, he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location before leaving.'
 	end
 	broken += 1
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'bound'
@@ -436,9 +434,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckB1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokenb1.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your master unchains you and leads you to a device.'
 	'You can see that it''s meant to restrain a person in a prone position with their head at the same height as someone''s crotch.'
-	'You want to please your master, so you lie down on it straight away. You dutifully await the attaching of the restraints.'
+	'You want to please your master, so you lie down on it straight away and dutifully await the attaching of the restraints.'
 	'After your master ties you up, he walks up to your head. Your already open mouth is then roughly fucked by his member.'
-	'When he''s about to cum, he pulls his dick out and points it towards your face. You welcome the flying sperm with open eyes and mouth with your tongue out.'
+	'When he''s about to cum, he pulls his dick out and points it towards your face. You stick your tongue out in anticipation. His cum soon splatters across your face and tongue.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'rough'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -451,11 +449,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckB2':
 	pain['asshole'] += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokenb2.jpg"></center>'
 	'Surprisingly, his dick is not wearing out. He moves behind you and starts to penetrate your ass.'
-	'You try to relax your anus as much as you can, so he enters you quite easily. Just a small reminder of pain goes through your muscles.'
+	'You relax your anus as much as you can, so he enters you quite easily. Just a small hint of pain pulses through you.'
 	'Fucking you furiously for some time, your master cums deep inside you.'
 	if broken = 1:
 		*nl
-		'"Very good, slave. You are on the path to redeem yourself." Finished with you, he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location. He then leaves your room with the door closing behind him.'
+		'"Very good, slave. You''re on the path to redeeming yourself." Finished with you, he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location before leaving.'
 	end
 	broken += 1
 	gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'Master'
@@ -472,7 +470,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSleep':
 	pcs_sleep += 50
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/bed1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You have slept for several hours, but nightmares have awakened you.'
+	'You''ve slept for several hours, but nightmares have awakened you.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
 
@@ -480,8 +478,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscape':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/cellarwindow1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are looking at the only window in the basement.'
-	'However, there is a lock on it to prevent your escape.'
+	'Looking at the only window in the basement, you notice that there''s a lock on it to prevent your escape.'
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Try to break the lock':gt 'abduction', 'abdEscapeWindow1'
@@ -497,10 +494,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscapeWindow1':
 	gs 'stat'
 	breakChance = rand(1, 100)
 	if breakChance <= 50:
-		'You hear someone slam a door nearby. Maybe it''s your master returning?!'
-		'You are so close to unscrewing the window! You decide to...'
+		'You hear someone slam a door nearby. Maybe it''s your master returning?'
+		'You''re close to unscrewing the window! You decide to...'
 		act 'Run back to your bed and reattach your leash to the wall':gt 'abduction', 'abdSomeoneComing'
-		act 'Try to unscrew it desperately':gt 'abduction', 'abdEscapeWindow2'
+		act 'Try to unscrew it':gt 'abduction', 'abdEscapeWindow2'
 	else
 		'No luck. The window is still screwed in very tight.'
 		act 'Go back':gt 'abduction', 'abdFood'
@@ -535,9 +532,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscapeWindow3':
 	gs 'underwear', 'dispose'
 	gs 'clothing', 'wear_last_worn'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/midnowhere<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'Pulling on your clothes as you run, you finally think you are far enough away and try to find your bearings.'
+	'Pulling on your clothes as you run, you finally think you''re far enough away and try to find your bearings.'
 	'Any underwear you had with you is lost, but that''s a small price to pay for your freedom.'
-	'You are in the middle of nowhere.'
+	'Looking around, you discover that you''re in the middle of nowhere.'
 	*nl
 	'Before you in the distance, you see a shimmer of something that could be water.'
 	'If you turn back, you can hear distant noise of what could be a highway.'
@@ -590,8 +587,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFood':
 
 	chainChance = rand(1,100)
 	if chainChance <= 20 and (rapeCount > 5 or tortureCount > 5):
-		'You spot a loose link on your chain. You try to manipulate it, and you manage to free yourself from the wall.'
-		'<a href="exec:gt ''abduction'', ''abdEscape''">Go to the window</a>'
+		'You spot a loose link on your chain. You try to manipulate it, and manage to free yourself from the wall.'
+		'<a href="exec:gt ''abduction'', ''abdEscape''">Run to the window.</a>'
 	end
 	act 'Eat dried food (0:10)':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -739,7 +736,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/mouthgagblow1.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
 		'Your hands are tied. A metal ring, fastened by a leather gag, is inside your mouth, keeping it pried open.'
-		'You have to endure a very rough mouth fuck. He knows no limits and gags you as much as he wants. He does let you breathe from time to time, but for most of the experience you feel like passing out. Your saliva is all over his dick and drips onto your tits and stomach.'
+		'You have to endure a very rough mouth fuck. He knows no limits and gags you as much as he wants. He does let you breathe from time to time, but for most of the experience you feel like you''re about to pass out. Your saliva is all over his dick and drips onto your breasts and stomach.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
 
@@ -750,7 +747,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		i = rand(1,5)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/fucktiedpussy<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
 		'Your hands are tied, and you''re bent over the bed.'
-		'The guy starts to penetrate your pussy without warning. A sharp pain goes through your abdomen because your pussy is not wet enough to receive a dick.'
+		'The guy starts to penetrate your pussy without warning. A sharp pain shoots through your abdomen because your pussy isn''t wet enough to receive a dick.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
 
@@ -765,7 +762,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/fucktiedanal1.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
 		'Your hands are tied, and you''re bent over the bed.'
-		'The guy starts to penetrate your ass without warning. A sharp pain goes through your anus as your ass is neither relaxed nor wet enough to receive a dick.'
+		'The guy starts to penetrate your ass without warning. A sharp pain shoots through your anus as your ass is neither relaxed nor wet enough to receive a dick.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
 
@@ -774,9 +771,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		pain['asshole'] += 8
 		pcs_ass += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/fistanal'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'Your hands and feet are tied with your ass being high above your head. This is because you are hanging upside down.'
+		'Your hands and feet are bound as you hang upside down with your ass in the air.'
 		'The guy starts trying to push his thick fist inside your anus. At least he used a bit of lubricant...'
-		'When your sphincter fails to resist anymore, you hear a loud pop as his fist quickly penetrates your insides.'
+		'When your sphincter fails to resist anymore, you hear a loud pop as his fist quickly penetrates you.'
 		'He doesn''t stop there and pushes his hand deep. You can feel your intestines expanding as he opens his fist inside you.'
 		'The pain is unbearable, but he doesn''t care.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_fist', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
@@ -791,7 +788,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		'Your hands and feet are tied with your ass raised higher than your head.'
 		'The guy starts pushing his thick fist deep inside your pussy. At least he used a bit of lubricant...'
 		'Suddenly, you feel his fingers touch your cervix. He''s doing it on purpose!'
-		'He''s pinching and pressing your cervix. You cry out loudly and try to shake him off, but you are bound. There''s no hope of success...'
+		'He''s pinching and pressing your cervix. You cry out loudly and try to shake him off, but you are bound tight. There''s no hope of success...'
 		'"Do you like it, slave?" He stops pushing, but you can feel a finger still brushing up against your cervix. "Should we penetrate another hole girl?"'
 		'"No! Please... stop... Just... stop..." you plead through tears.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_fist', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
@@ -811,7 +808,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/mouthgagblow1.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
 		'Your hands are tied. A metal ring, fastened by a leather gag, is inside your mouth, keeping it pried open.'
-		'You have to endure a very rough mouth fuck. He knows no limits and gags you as much as he wants. He does let you breathe from time to time, but for most of the experience you feel like passing out. Your saliva is all over his dick and drips onto your tits and stomach.'
+		'You have to endure a very rough mouth fuck. He knows no limits and gags you as much as he wants. He does let you breathe from time to time, but for most of the experience you feel like you''re about to pass out. Your saliva is all over his dick and drips onto your breasts and stomach.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
 
@@ -848,10 +845,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureA1':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturea1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are taken from your bed and led to the far side of the basement. Suspicious looking rings and straps can be seen attached to the wall.'
-	'Your hands are secured with a rope high on the wall.'
-	'Your legs are unpleasantly lifted above your head and secured as well.'
-	'Now you are hanging by your hands with your pussy and ass available for any perverted usage.'
+	'You''re dragged from your bed and led to the far side of the basement. Suspicious looking rings and straps can be seen attached to the wall.'
+	'Your hands are secured with a rope high on the wall and your legs are unpleasantly lifted above your head and secured as well.'
+	'You''re now hanging by your hands with your pussy and ass available for any perverted usage.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdTortureA2'
 end
 
@@ -875,11 +871,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureA3':
 	pain['asshole'] += 5
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturea3.jpg"></center>'
-	'After a while, the tormentor comes back and brings a dildo that''s attached to a long stick.'
-	'"Mmmphh!" is the only sound you are able to make in protest of what''s coming towards you.'
+	'After a while, the tormentor returns with a dildo attached to a long stick.'
+	'"Mmmphh!" is the only sound you''re able to make in protest of what''s coming towards you.'
 	'Without any warning, he stuffs the dildo inside your ass. It goes so deep that you can feel it push against your intestines.'
-	'He secures the stick to the ground then leaves the room.'
-	'You swing on the rope to the left and right as you try to push it out of your ass. However, it is too deep inside of you, and the stick does not move.'
+	'He secures the stick to the ground before leaving the room.'
+	'You swing on the rope left and right trying to push the dildo out of your ass. However, it''s too deep inside you.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -891,10 +887,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureA4':
 	menu_off = 1
 	pain['tummy'] += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturea4.jpg"></center>'
-	'After what seems like an eternity, the tormentor comes back again.'
-	'Pleased to find you with tears and saliva all over your tits and stomach, he unscrews the stick.'
-	'As a last sign of the torture, he pushes the stick even deeper inside you in a single stroke then swiftly takes it out.'
-	'You start to tremble a lot, but you know it is finally over.'
+	'After what seems like an eternity, the tormentor returns.'
+	'Pleased to find you with tears and saliva all over your breasts and stomach, he unscrews the stick.'
+	'As a last sign of the torture, he pushes the stick even deeper inside you in a single thrust before swiftly removing it.'
+	'You start to tremble, but you know it''s finally over.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -907,9 +903,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB1':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are forced to the ground to lay on your stomach.'
-	'First your hands are tied together and raised high in the air. You can feel your joints being bent to their limits. Any more bending and your shoulders would pop.'
-	'Your legs are then forced wide apart and secured on opposite sides. You cannot move an inch.'
+	'You''re forced to lay on your stomach on the cold ground.'
+	'Your hands are tied together and raised high in the air. You can feel your joints being bent to their limits. Your legs are then forced wide apart and secured on opposite sides. You can''t move an inch.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdTortureB2'
 end
 
@@ -918,7 +913,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB2':
 	menu_off = 1
 	pain['asscheeks'] += 10
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You hear your tormentor coming back towards you.'
+	'You hear your tormentor returning.'
 	'"Uummmphh!" is the sound your gagged mouth makes as the cane suddenly strikes your ass.'
 	'You are given a thorough ass whipping.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
@@ -934,8 +929,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB3':
 	pain['vaginal'] += 2
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb3.jpg"></center>'
-	'As soon as the whipping stops, you feel a new source of pain in both your pussy and your ass - something is being pushed inside both of your holes.'
-	'You are given no time to adjust, and both holes are fucked viciously, fast and deep.'
+	'As soon as the whipping stops, you feel a new source of pain in both your pussy and your ass - something is being pushed inside both your holes.'
+	'You''re given no time to adjust, and both your holes are fucked viciously, fast and deep.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -948,7 +943,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB4':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb4.jpg"></center>'
-	'Finally, your pussy and anus are left alone. Whatever was inside of you has been removed.'
+	'Finally, your pussy and ass are left alone. Whatever was inside you has been removed.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
 
@@ -956,10 +951,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureC1':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturec1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your tormentor looks angry. Your hands are tied behind your back and legs.'
-	'He attaches a rope to your feet - you are lifted like a pig to be cleaned!'
-	'After some minutes of just hanging, your tormentor comes at you with a leather whip.'
-	'He spins you around and whips whatever comes before him. Ass, back, belly, pussy, legs, tits. The whip hits your exposed flesh and leaves angry looking welts behind.'
+	'Your tormentor looks angry. Your hands are tied behind your back and legs. He attaches a rope to your feet and you''re suddenlt lifted into the air upside down.'
+	'After a few minutes where you''re left hanging, your tormentor approaches you with a leather whip.'
+	'He spins you around and whips whatever comes before him. Ass, back, stomach, pussy, legs, breasts. The whip hits your exposed flesh and leaves angry looking welts behind.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -989,8 +983,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD1':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your tormentor brings a crude rope...'
-	'You tremble as you wonder what he''s going to do with it... Will he spank you or is he tired of you and just wants to hang you?'
+	'Your tormentor brings a crude rope and you tremble as you wonder what he''s going to do with it.'
 	'You almost sigh in relief when he "just" ties you up.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdTortureD2'
 end
@@ -999,10 +992,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD2':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are forced down on your knees on top of some kind of weird bench. The ropes are fixed so you cannot move an inch.'
-	'Not being able to see what is going on behind you, you suddenly feel something cold touching your asshole.'
-	'With a single thrust, something is shoved really deep inside your anus.'
-	'Tears stream down your face and you cry out loudly...'
+	'You''re forced down on your knees on top of some kind of bench. The ropes are fixed so you can''t move.'
+	'Not being able to see what''s going on behind you, you suddenly feel something cold touching your asshole.'
+	'With a single thrust, something is shoved deep inside your anus. Tears stream down your face and you cry out loudly.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1016,7 +1008,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD3':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured3.jpg"></center>'
 	'Next is your tender pussy. He shoves the dildo in, not giving you any time to adjust.'
 	'Last comes your mouth. Finally, you can see what is being inserted into your every hole: dildos attached to long wooden sticks.'
-	'The sticks are fixed tightly to the device - if you move just a bit, any one of them gets shoved even deeper. It brings you even more discomfort and pain to your already abused body.'
+	'The sticks are fixed tightly to the device - if you move just a bit, any one of them gets shoved even deeper. It brings even more discomfort and pain to your already abused body.'
 	'Your tormentor walks away to leave you in this state for what feels like an eternity.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 60, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1028,8 +1020,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD4':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured4.jpg"></center>'
-	'Finally he comes back.'
-	'You are unplugged, but your torture is far from over.'
+	'He finally returns and comes back. You''re unplugged, but your torture is far from over.'
 	'"Suck me and this will be over. For now..."'
 	'You have no choice but to do what he orders.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 60, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
@@ -1048,7 +1039,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD5':
 	gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'Master'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured5.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Even though your head is spinning and everything is aching inside you, you are able to make him cum in just a few minutes.'
+	'Even though your head is spinning and everything is aching inside you, you''re able to make him cum in just a few minutes.'
 	'Being bound, he shows you no remorse and fucks you raw before cumming in your very sore throat.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
@@ -1060,32 +1051,31 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBeSold':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'"We have a buyer for you." your master says with a cruel smile.'
-	act 'I do not want to be sold':gt 'abduction', 'abdConsiderSold'
+	'"We have a buyer for you..." your master says with a cruel smile.'
+	act 'I don''t want to be sold':gt 'abduction', 'abdConsiderSold'
 	act 'I want to leave':gt 'abduction', 'abdSoldSauna'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdConsiderSold':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'"Are you sure slave?" he asks, after which he says "you will stay here and continue to be used..."'
-	act 'Yes, that''s what I want':gt 'abduction', 'abdNotSold'
-	act 'On second thought, I want to leave this place':gt 'abduction', 'abdSoldSauna'
+	'"Are you sure slave?" he asks. "You''ll stay here and continue to be used..."'
+	act 'Yes':gt 'abduction', 'abdNotSold'
+	act 'Change your mind':gt 'abduction', 'abdSoldSauna'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdNotSold':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'"Very well. We will see each other again soon." your master says.'
+	'"Very well. We''ll see each other again soon," your master says.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSoldSauna':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'"A nice lady from an established business." he smiles.'
-	'You are blindfolded and led away to a car.'
-	'After some time, you are led through doors and finally the blindfold is removed. You are in a backroom of a brothel.'
-	'"The madame of the brothel stands before you. "I paid 8000 <b>₽</b> for you bitch. Don''t make me regret this."'
-	'"Yes, madame." you reply.'
-	'"I''m not a bad person." she continues. "If you earn me at least five times more than what I paid, I may let you go."'
+	'You are blindfolded and led away to a car. After some time, you are led through doors and the blindfold is removed. You are in a backroom of a brothel.'
+	'"The madame of the brothel stands before you. "I paid 8000 <b>₽</b> for you, bitch. Don''t make me regret this."'
+	'"Yes, madame." you obediently reply.'
+	'"I''m not a bad person," she continues. "If you earn me at least five times more than what I paid, I may let you go."'
 	'With this faint sign of hope, she leaves you alone.'
 	workDolg = 40000
 
@@ -1109,7 +1099,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomer':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailed.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Angrily, your master leads you back to the basement.'
+	'Your master angrily leads you back to the basement.'
 
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomer1'
 end
@@ -1131,7 +1121,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomer2':
 	menu_off = 1
 	pain['asshole'] += 2
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailed2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He then forces a considerable plug into your anus with little warning. Being tied up, you cannot resist in any way.'
+	'He then forces a considerable plug into your anus with little warning. Being tied up, you can''t resist in any way.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1145,9 +1135,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomer3':
 	pain['throat'] += 10
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailed3.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Continuing, he blindfolds you and attaches a ring gag, which stops you from closing your mouth. Now completely helpless, you hear him walking away, leaving you to wonder what he has planned next.'
-	'After some time of relative quiet, you hear someone coming. In a matter of seconds, someone grabs your head. He pushes his warm cock into your mouth and down your throat, making it impossible to breathe.'
-	'You panic and freak out, but he doesn''t let go until you are on the verge of passing out.'
-	'Only then does he stop, not letting you escape into unconsciousness.'
+	'After some time of relative quiet, you hear someone approaching. In a matter of seconds, someone grabs your head. He pushes his warm cock into your mouth and down your throat, making it impossible to breathe.'
+	'You panic, but he doesn''t let go until you''re on the verge of passing out. Only then does he stop, not letting you escape into unconsciousness.'
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1169,7 +1158,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerElectro1':
 	pain['nipples'] += 20
 	pain['breasts'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedelectro1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Your restraints are removed, but you are led to a wall to be chained anew to a different device.'
+	'Your restraints are removed, but you''re led to a wall to be chained anew to a different device.'
 	'This time, you can see everything - but you wish you couldn''t.'
 	'Electrodes are taped to your nipples, clitoris, and vagina.'
 	'Your master takes a few steps back and pushes a button on a remote. In that moment, an electric shock goes through your whole body, causing you to shake.'
@@ -1188,9 +1177,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerElectro2':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedelectro2.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Your legs are pulled into the air and restrained to a wall. You hang by your hands with both of your holes fully at their disposal.'
 	'The first plug is violently taken out with a loud "SCHLOP".'
-	'However, your anus isn''t left empty for long as in a few moments a new plug is inserted. Fear grips you as you see the wires hanging out of it.'
-	'The remote button is pushed again, and this time you can feel it all inside your intestines and anus.'
-	'The sensation is very strange. It''s as if your belly was full of popping popcorn.'
+	'However, your anus isn''t left empty for long as a new plug is quickly inserted. Fear grips you as you see the wires hanging out of it.'
+	'The remote button is pushed again, and this time you can feel it inside your intestines and anus.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1209,7 +1197,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerElectro3':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedelectro3.jpg"></center>'
 	'Finally, your torment is at an end.'
 	'"Remember this lesson slave. If you disappoint a customer again, a more severe punishment may be forced upon you."'
-	'"If you are found to be more trouble than you are worth, one of our more perverse customers will pay us well for the opportunity to torture you to death."'
+	'"If you''re found to be more trouble than you''re worth, one of our more perverse customers will pay us well for the opportunity to torture you to death."'
 	'You just nod that you understand and remain silent.'
 	*nl
 	'Your master leaves without another word - and you are left hanging on the wall.'
@@ -1223,8 +1211,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook1':
 	menu_off = 1
 	pain['asshole'] += 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedhook1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You are put on all fours and chained. Your ass is high in the air, showing both your holes to anyone standing behind you.'
-	'Somebody you don''t see comes up from behind to remove the buttplug with a loud "SCHLOP" and immediately after... very violently... shoves something cold inside your anus.'
+	'You''re put on all fours and chained. Your ass is high in the air, showing both your holes to anyone standing behind you.'
+	'Somebody you don''t see approaches from behind to remove the buttplug with a loud "SCHLOP" and immediately, and very violently, shoves something cold inside your anus.'
 	'You cry in both pain and surprise.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1239,7 +1227,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook2':
 	pain['clitoris'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedhook2.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Trying to look behind you, you see your master bring something in his hands.'
-	'He puts it up against your pussy and suddenly it starts to vibrate.'
+	'He puts it up against your pussy and it suddenly starts to vibrate.'
 	'The intensity is too much for you, and instead of bringing you pleasure, it feels like a devious mix of intense pain and orgasmic pulses.'
 	'After a while, you piss yourself while experiencing something like a very painful orgasm.'
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
@@ -1256,8 +1244,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook3':
 	pain['cervix'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedhook3.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Your pussy is very sensitive after the vibrator treatment, and your master knows that all too well.'
-	'He slams his dick deep inside you to hit your cervix. It seems to you that he is doing it on purpose.'
-	'You try to beg for mercy, but he just doesn''t care. He wants you to suffer - this is your punishment...'
+	'He slams his dick deep inside you to hit your cervix. It seems like he''s doing it on purpose.'
+	'You try to beg for mercy, but he doesn''t care. He wants you to suffer - this is your punishment...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1276,12 +1264,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook4':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedhook4.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Finally, you faint from all the abuse.'
 	'You wake up alone in the room, but your position has been changed while you were unconscious.'
-	'You are bound on some kind of a stool, hands tied together, and most importantly, your ass is lifted in the air and hanging by the hook.'
+	'You are bound on some kind of stool, hands tied together, and most importantly, your ass is lifted in the air and hanging by the hook.'
 	*nl
 	'You start to realize the pain of hanging by your asshole, so you try to push your legs up to move your ass even higher.'
-	'However, you can only remain in that position for a little while before you get tired and relax your legs. The pain quickly returns to your hook elevated asshole.'
-	'Nobody is nearby, but you already know all too well that no one will take pity on you anyway...'
-    'You just have to wait hoping this part of your punishment will end soon.'
+	'However, you can only remain in that position for a few minutes before you get tired and are forced to relax your legs, allowing the pain to quickly return to your stretched asshole.'
+	'Nobody is nearby, but you know all too well that no one will take pity on you anyway. You just have to hope that this part of your punishment will end soon.'
 
 	act 'Wait':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack'
 end
@@ -1294,7 +1281,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip1':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Your master removes your bondage and in anger pushes you on the ground before spreading your legs.'
 	'"You fucking whore! You''re going to learn how to be more fucking obedient!"'
-	'He starts to spank your pussy with his big hand.'
+	'He starts to spank your pussy with his hand.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1309,12 +1296,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip2':
 	pain['asscheeks'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip2.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'After a while, he cools down, but your pussy is already red and stinging.'
-	'He grabs you by your hair and leads you to another device. You have to lie down on your shoulders and put your ass high in the air.'
-	'He affixes you into this uncomfortable position with some straps.'
+	'He grabs you by your hair and leads you to another device. You have to lie down on your shoulders and put your ass high in the air before he affixes you into this uncomfortable position with some straps.'
 	*nl
-	'Content with how helpless and at his disposal you are, he grabs a rubber baton.'
+	'Content with how helpless you are, he grabs a rubber baton.'
 	'He hits you hard, targeting your exposed labia, causing intense pain to shoot through your body.'
-	'From time to time, he alternates, by giving your asscheeks an even harder hit.'
+	'From time to time, he alternates, giving your asscheeks an even harder hit.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1330,9 +1316,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip3':
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip3.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'As if the baton wasn''t enough, your master reaches for a long dildo attached to a stick.'
-	'With one stroke he penetrates your dry ass and fixes the stick to the wall. The stick is not wooden... it is metal and very heavy. It''s weight is enough to push your guts aside as it presses against your intestinal walls.'
+	'With one heavy thrust, he penetrates your dry ass and fixes the stick to the wall. The metal stick''s weight is enough to push your guts aside as it presses against your intestinal walls.'
 	*nl
-	'He then picks up a different weapon - a cat-o-nine whip that''s made of leather.'
+	'He then picks up a different weapon - a leather cat-o-nine whip.'
 	'His target is the same - your now raw and heavily stinging labia and clitoris.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1351,23 +1337,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip4':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip4.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'After this even rougher punishment, you are on the brink of fainting.'
 	'Your master brings another device on a stick - a vibrator with a large head.'
-	'He buries the head deep between your labia while touching your clitoris directly, your position ideal for this.'
+	'He buries the head deep between your labia while touching your clitoris directly, your position being ideal for this.'
 	*nl
 	'When the device is turned on, you realize it must be on the highest setting. It almost makes you orgasm instantly.'
-	'Your master leaves, and you are left alone with this device turned on, the anal dildo still pushing deep into your ass as well. Everything aches from this inhuman position.'
-	'You pass in and out of consciousness, every now and then having strong orgasms mixed with a lot of pain. You tremble helplessly.'
-	'The only sounds in the room are your moans and the humming of the vibrator.'
+	'Your master leaves, and you''re left alone with this device teasing you as the dildo continues pushing deep into your ass. Everything aches from this inhuman position.'
+	'You pass in and out of consciousness while having intense orgasms mixed with a lot of pain. You tremble helplessly, the only sounds in the room being your moans and the humming of the vibrator.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_vibe', 240, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	act 'Endure':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack'
+	act 'Endure it':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/chainedback.jpg"></center>'
-	'After what seems like an eternity, you''re unbound and returned to your usual place - chained to the wall.'
+	'After what seems like an eternity, you''re unbound and chained back to the wall.'
 
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
@@ -1379,7 +1364,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildos':
 	dildoBig = 30
 	dildoHorse = 35
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildos1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take the dildos from the ground and clean them up a bit in the shower.'
+	'You take the dildos from the ground and clean them up in the shower.'
 	'There are four of them: small, regular, big, and horse sized.'
 
 	act 'Train your ass':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalGate'
@@ -1424,9 +1409,9 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosSmall':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_vag > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your pussy can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 	else
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 	end
 	act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosSmallUse'
 	act 'Choose different dildo':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosVaginaGate'
@@ -1455,10 +1440,10 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosRegular':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_vag >= dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your pussy can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosRegularUse'
 	elseif pcs_vag <= dildoRegular and pcs_vag > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosRegularUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your pussy apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1492,7 +1477,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosBig':
 		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosBigUse'
 	elseif pcs_vag <= dildoBig and pcs_vag > dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosBigUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your pussy apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1523,10 +1508,10 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosHorse':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_vag >= dildoHorse:
-		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'Despite its size, you feel that your pussy can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosHorseUse'
 	elseif pcs_vag <= dildoHorse and pcs_vag > dildoBig:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosHorseUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your pussy apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1558,9 +1543,9 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalSmall':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_ass > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your anus can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 	else
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 	end
 	act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalSmallUse'
 	act 'Choose different dildo':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalGate'
@@ -1589,10 +1574,10 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegular':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_ass >= dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your anus can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegularUse'
 	elseif pcs_ass <= dildoRegular and pcs_ass > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegularUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your anus apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1623,10 +1608,10 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalBig':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_ass >= dildoBig:
-		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your anus can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalBigUse'
 	elseif pcs_ass <= dildoBig and pcs_ass > dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalBigUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your anus apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1657,10 +1642,10 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalHorse':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_ass >= dildoHorse:
-		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'Despite its size, you feel that your anus can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalHorseUse'
 	elseif pcs_ass <= dildoHorse and pcs_ass > dildoBig:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalHorseUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your anus apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1691,9 +1676,9 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthSmall':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_throat > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your throat can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 	else
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
 	end
 	act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthSmallUse'
 	act 'Choose different dildo':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthGate'
@@ -1722,10 +1707,10 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegular':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_throat >= dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your throat can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegularUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoRegular and pcs_throat > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegularUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your throat apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1756,10 +1741,10 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthBig':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_throat >= dildoBig:
-		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your throat can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthBigUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoBig and pcs_throat > dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthBigUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your throat apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1790,10 +1775,10 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorse':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_throat >= dildoHorse:
-		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
+		'Despite its size, you feel that your throat can easily accommodate this dildo.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorseUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoHorse and pcs_throat > dildoBig:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
+		'This dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorseUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your throat apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'

locations/abductionCustomer.qsrc

@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGate':
 	'Your master approaches you. "Hello, slave."'
 	'"I have a customer here who came to rent you for a while. Do whatever he asks of you."'
 	buyout = 0
-	act 'Yes, Master.':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGo'
+	act 'Yes, Master':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGo'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGateBuyout':
@@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGateBuyout':
 	'Your master approaches you. "Hello, slave."'
 	'"I have a customer here that came to rent you for a while. Do whatever he asks of you."'
 	buyout = 1
-	act 'Yes, Master.':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGo'
+	act 'Yes, Master':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGo'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGo':
@@ -174,10 +174,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 		$bName = 'Leonid'
 		$bSurname = 'Nosov'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneel1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you are led to the room, as usual, you see the man standing opposite of you.'
-		'Right away you can see that he is just another bastard coming here to use your <<age>> years young body.'
-		'Your master leaves you in the center of the room. You are still kneeling with the leash attached to your collar.'
-		'As the door closes behind him, the customer slowly turns, so you can finally see his face.'
+		'As you are led to the room as usual, you see the man standing opposite of you.'
+		'Right away, you can see that he is just another bastard coming here to use your body.'
+		'Your master leaves you in the center of the room, kneeling with the leash attached to your collar.'
+		'As the door closes behind him, the customer slowly turns so you can finally see his face.'
 		act 'Look at his face':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyout1'
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneelmaster.mp4"></video></center>'
@@ -196,13 +196,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 			'"That''s how I like it."'
 		else
 			'"Good number. She''s a good slut, too."'
-			'"We will see."'
+			'"We shall see."'
 		end
 		act 'Sob and wait':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin1'
 	else
 		if buyout = 0:
 			'He is clearly expecting you to start pleasuring him. You decide to:'
-			act 'Show him your beautiful body':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-show'
+			act 'Show him your body':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-show'
 			act 'Unzip his pants':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-unzip'
 		end
 	end
@@ -213,7 +213,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/leonid/leonid.jpg"></center>'
 	'As you look up at his face, a chill runs down your spine - you know him!'
 	'You remember this man from one of the parent-school conferences. It''s Dimka''s dad, <<$bName>>!'
-	'He recognizes you too. "Oh... what the? Who do we have here? Isn''t this that missing girl, <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>?'
+	'He recognizes you too. "Oh... what the? Who do we have here? Aren''t that missing girl, <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>?'
 	*nl
 	'With a trembling voice, only a few words leave your mouth. "Th... that''s me mister <<$bSurname>>..."'
 	'"You do realize that the police have already given up searching for you. As if they made any effort though..."'
@@ -221,8 +221,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout1':
 	'There is a short period of silence, but despite the unexpected situation, you keep kneeling with your back straight and breasts jutting forward, as you have been trained to do.'
 	
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneel2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Then suddenly, the look on <<$bName>>''s face changes from surprised to something else.'
-	'He comes up to you and gently caresses your face, "Plaything, you say? And do you like it?"'
+	'The look on <<$bName>>''s face then changes from surprised to something else.'
+	'He approaches you and gently caresses your face. "Plaything, you say? And do you like it?"'
 	'Surprised by such a question, you consider how to reply:'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'hard'
@@ -242,21 +242,21 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout2':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneelmaster.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'"What a nice submissive slut you have become. What would your mother say about this?"'
-	'"I''d rather you didn''t let her know how I ended up." you meekly reply.'
+	'"I''d rather you didn''t let her know how I ended up..." you meekly reply.'
 	'"This establishment really gets the job done. I must commend the owner."'
 	*nl
 	'He leaves the room and you can hear the echo of a discussion between him and your master.'
-	'After a while, <<$bName>> comes back. "Let''s go <<$pcs_firstname>>." He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
-	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I have never been in this part of the house before."'
-	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you and you are now my property. You are... my slave."'
-	'You are still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into his trunk.'
+	'After a while, <<$bName>> returns. "Let''s go <<$pcs_firstname>>." He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
+	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I''ve never been in this part of the house before."'
+	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve just bought you and you are now my property. You are... my slave."'
+	'You''re still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into the trunk.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout3':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreleonid1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'"In that case, let''s have some fun before we get straight to business."'
 	'He slaps your face so hard that you lose your balance and fall face first onto the floor.'
-	'You are taken by surprise by the blow - you had started to think that you were finally about to be saved from all of this.'
+	'You are taken by surprise by the blow - you thought you were finally about to be saved from all of this.'
 	'However, <<$bName>> seems to be as perverted as all the other men that have used you previously.'
 	'Stepping above you as you helplessly lie on the floor, he opens his zipper to pull out his dick.'
 	'You can clearly see his <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dick swing above you in the air.'
@@ -281,18 +281,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout4':
 	'A few minutes later, <<$bName>> comes back into the room. "I really like you <<$pcs_firstname>>."'
 	*nl
 	'He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
-	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I have never been in this part of the house."'
-	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you and you are now my property. You are... my slave."'
-	'You are still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into his trunk.'
+	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I''ve never been in this part of the house before."'
+	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve just bought you and you are now my property. You are... my slave."'
+	'You''re still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into the trunk.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/garage.jpg"></center>'
-	'Stuffed inside of the trunk, you can only hear the sound of the engine and the pavement below as he drives you somewhere unknown.'
-	'After an unknown amount of time, the sound of the pavement stops, and the engine shuts off, leaving only silence.'
-	'<<$bName>> opens the trunk. Your eyes blink to adjust to the dimly lit area, and you realize that you are in an underground parking garage.'
+	'Stuffed inside the trunk, you can only hear the sound of the engine and the pavement below as he drives you somewhere unknown.'
+	'After an unknown amount of time, the engine shuts off, leaving only silence.'
+	'<<$bName>> opens the trunk. Your eyes blink to adjust to the dimly lit area, and you realize that you''re in an underground parking garage.'
 	'You climb out, still naked and collared like a dog. It seems he doesn''t care about your feelings at all.'
-	'He takes your leash and leads you on all fours up the stairs. You both exit through the stairwell door into a room that appears to be an office.'
+	'He takes your leash and leads you on all fours up the stairs. You exit through the stairwell door into a room that appears to be an office.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'leonid', 'firstTime'
 end
 
@@ -301,10 +301,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin1':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Your master leaves, and your body starts to shiver.'
 	'"Don''t worry slut. This will only hurt a lot!" the customer laughs. He is clearly enjoying himself.'
-	'You run to the far corner of the room in a futile attempt to get as far away from him as you can.'
+	'You quickly back up into the far corner of the room in a futile attempt to get as far away from him as you can.'
 	'He walks up to you and grabs you by the hair. He drags you as a pained, terrified scream emits from your throat to something that looks like a bench in the center of the room.'
 	'He forcefully yanks your hair to make you climb onto the bench like structure. He punches you in the stomach, and you collapse. He then flips you over onto your back and binds your arms above your head with handcuffs. He follows with putting your legs into stirrups, with legcuffs to hold you in place. You realize that this gives him unlimited access to your virgin pussy.'
-	'Your head is bound so that you have an unobstructed view on your own pussy. This is to ensure that you watch as he tears your terrified cunt apart.'
+	'Your head is bound so that you have an unobstructed view on your own pussy. This is to ensure that you watch as he tears you apart.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin2'
 end
@@ -312,7 +312,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin2':
 	minut += 2
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He starts to slowly undress, with his back to you to enhance your terror. You hear a loud clink as his pants, holding a belt, hit the concrete floor. He slowly turns around to face you, and you can finally see his naked body. His cock sways for a moment before stopping in front of your face.'
+	'He starts to slowly undress, his back turned to you to enhance your terror. You hear a loud clink as his pants, holding a belt, hit the concrete floor. He slowly turns around to face you, and you can finally see his naked body. His cock sways for a moment before stopping in front of your face.'
 	'"With renewed terror, you start to cry at the sight of his <<dick>> cm thick <<$dick_girth>> cock."'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin3'
@@ -320,19 +320,19 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin3':
 	minut += 10
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin3.jpg"></center>'
-	'He starts to jerk his cock, all the while looking at your eyes then to your bound and helpless nude body. The sight slowly makes his cock hard.'
-	'In his eyes, you can see he relishes looking at you in your despair.'
+	'He starts to jerk his cock while looking at your eyes, then to your bound and helpless nude body. The sight slowly makes his cock hard.'
+	'You can tell he relishes looking at you in your despair.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin4'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin4.jpg"></center>'
 	'He finally reaches for you and brings the tip of his dick to the entrance of your virgin pussy.'
-	'He covers his <<$dick_girth>> member in a thick layer of lube then starts to slowly press against the opening of your vagina.'
+	'He covers his <<$dick_girth>> member in a thick layer of lube and starts to slowly press against the opening of your pussy.'
 	'With his hands, he spreads your pussy lips apart to help ease the entry for his member.'
-	'"Now behold girl. You are about to become a woman." he exclaims.'
+	'"Now behold girl. You are about to become a woman!" he exclaims.'
 	'He pushes it in with a single long thrust that almost hits the bottom of your virgin cunt.'
-	'A terrible pain rips through your body, beginning where your hymen was and spreading like a fire. A trickle of blood runs down the shaft of his cock.'
+	'Pain rips through your body, spreading like a fire as a trickle of blood runs down the shaft of his cock.'
 	pcs_vag += 1
 	stat['vaginal'] += 1
 	pain['vaginal'] += 20
@@ -344,7 +344,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin5':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin5.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'He pulls his cock back out and shows it to you, enjoying the expression you make seeing your blood coating it.'
 	'He then slams his cock back into you. The pain you feel is renewed while he grunts in pleasure.'
-	'He feels accomplishment in his handiwork and sneers at you. He brutally thrusts into your pussy over and over again. He often hits your cervix with his <<dick>> cm long thick <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
+	'He feels accomplishment in his handiwork and sneers at you as he brutally thrusts into your pussy over and over again. He often hits your cervix with his <<dick>> cm long thick <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
 	pain['vaginal'] += 10
 	pain['cervix'] += 10
 	pain['tummy'] += 10
@@ -355,8 +355,8 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin6':
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin6.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'"And now whore you will receive your first load of cum. You will become the breeder you were always supposed to be!"'
-	'As renewed tears stream down your cheeks, he spurts his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm <<dick>> cm deep inside your pussy. You can feel it hit your cervix, and you shudder at the thought of you getting pregnant from this monster.'
+	'"And now you will receive your first load of cum, whore. You will become the breeder you were always supposed to be!"'
+	'As renewed tears stream down your cheeks, he spurts his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm <<dick>> cm deep inside your pussy. You can feel it hit your cervix, and you shudder at the thought of getting pregnant from this monster.'
 	gs 'cum_call', 'pussy', 'deflowering pervert'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Cry more':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin7'
@@ -394,7 +394,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin9':
 	pcs_sleep += 70
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin9.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your hands still bound, you are thrown on your bed and are once again chained to the wall.'
-	'Your master leaves and you are left lying on the bed, your vagina still plugged by the <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dildo.'
+	'Your master leaves and you are left lying on the bed, your pussy still plugged by the <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dildo.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Try to rest':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin10'
 end
@@ -403,15 +403,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin10':
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin10.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'The sound of your master coming downstairs wakes you up. You must have fallen asleep from the exhaustion.'
-    '"Kneel and stick your ass high in the air slut."'
+    '"Kneel and get that ass in the air, slut."'
 	*nl
-	'You are so desperate that you don''t even think about not doing what he orders you. You just stick your ass as high as possible.'
+	'You''re so desperate that you don''t even think about not doing what he orders you. You just stick your ass as high as possible.'
 	'It points so he has good access to both your ass and your ruthlessly plugged, deflowered pussy.'
 	'Your master kneels down to remove the duct tape with a single pull. You yelp in pain from the tiny pubic hairs that get ripped out with the tape. He puts his fingers inside you to grab the stuck dildo.'
 	*nl
-	'Slowly, he takes it out. Remnants of your virgin blood and the customer''s sperm are smeared all over it.'
-	'Your empty vagina gives you a rush of relief as the cool air flows in to fill the void.'
-	'Your master unties you then adjusts your chain. As he leaves, he tells you "Be glad that you can be deflowered only once, you silly girl."'
+	'He slowly removes it. Remnants of your blood and the customer''s sperm are smeared all over it.'
+	'Your now empty pussy gives you a rush of relief as the cool air flows in to fill the void.'
+	'Your master unties you and adjusts your chain. As he leaves, he stops and grins at you. "Be glad that you can only be deflowered once, you silly girl."'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
@@ -421,15 +421,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-unzip':
 	minut += 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	'You reach towards his crotch and slowly start to unzip his trousers.'
-	'Pressing your face underneath his crotch, you pull down his pants and a <<$dick_girth>> member falls out. It lands directly onto your face with a loud slapping sound.'
+	'Pressing your face underneath his crotch, you pull down his pants and a <<$dick_girth>> member falls out. It lands directly on your face with a loud slap.'
 	if dick > 15 and dick < 25:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip1.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock with respect.'
+		'You admire his <<$dick_girth>> cock.'
 	elseif dick >= 25:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip2.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock with horror. You imagine what terrible things this sizable dick will do to your tender body.'
+		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock in horror. You imagine what terrible things it will do to your tender body.'
 	elseif dick < 15 and pcs_throat > dick:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip3.mp4"></video></center>'
@@ -473,8 +473,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-show':
 	minut += 10
 	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoretease<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You decide to tease the customer by showing him your sexy breasts and jiggling them.'
-	'After some time of behaving like a slut, it is obvious that he wants something more.'
+	'You decide to tease the customer by jiggling and squeezing your breasts.'
+	'After a few minutes, it''s obvious that he wants something more.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-unzip'
 end
 
@@ -483,7 +483,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 	gs 'stat'
 	i = rand(1,5)	
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreblowjobtip<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You try as best as you can to suck the head of his <<dick>> cm sized <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
+	'You try your best to suck the head of his <<dick>> cm sized <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
 	if pcs_throat < dick:
 		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill level and you know you can''t safely swallow it whole.'	
 	else
@@ -492,18 +492,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>> is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
+			'<<$bName>> is starting to get annoyed. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
 		else
-			'Your customer is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
+			'Your customer is starting to get annoyed. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
 		end
 		'Suddenly, without any warning, he takes a step back, which pulls his <<$dick_girth>> member out of your mouth.'
-		'With an angry look in his eyes, he slaps your face very hard, which knocks you to the cold floor.'
-		'He jumps on top of your chest, and with a piece of rope, he ties you up.'
+		'With an angry look in his eyes, he slaps your face very hard, which knocks you to the cold floor. He then jumps on top of you and ties you up with some rope.'
 		'"Even here, one must train the slaves himself!" he shouts at you. He forces his <<$dick_girth>> dick all the way down your throat.'
-		'With your hands tied up, you are unable to resist. All you can do is struggle to avoid suffocating as best you can...'
+		'With your hands tied, you''re unable to resist. All you can do is struggle to avoid suffocating as best you can.'
 		act 'Endure':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckForced'
 	elseif $charType = 'neutral':
-		'Your customer seems displeased by your performance. You are starting to worry about what he''ll do if you don''t satisfy him well enough...'
+		'Your customer seems displeased by your performance. You''re starting to worry about what he''ll do if you don''t satisfy him well enough...'
 		forceChance = rand(1, 100)
 		if forceChance <= 70:
 			act 'Continue sucking the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckForced'
@@ -538,7 +537,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 			end
 		end
 	elseif $charType = 'kind':
-		'Your customer seems pleased by your skill, so you continue to tease the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock. You look at him with as much sensual abandon as you can muster under the present conditions.'
+		'Your customer seems pleased with your skill, so you continue to tease the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock. You look at him with as much sensual abandon as you can muster under the present conditions.'
 		act 'Continue sucking the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuck'
 	end
 end
@@ -568,9 +567,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckForced':
 	else
 		'Your customer growls and suddenly pulls his cock out of your mouth.'
 	end
-	'"What kind of slave are you when you can''t swallow my <<$dick_girth>> dick?"'
+	'"What kind of slave are you when you can''t swallow my dick?"'
 	'He ties you up and forces his cock down your throat. He shows little to no concern for your wellbeing.'
-	'You start to gag as he keeps pushing his member deep inside you. Sometimes this leaves you on the brink of passing out.'
+	'You start to gag as he keeps pushing his member deep inside you, leaving you on the brink of passing out.'
 	vagOrAss = rand (0,1)
 	if buyout = 1:
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough'
@@ -599,19 +598,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuck':
 	gs 'stat'
 	endPunishment = 0
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecockremoved.jpg"></center>'
-	'It seems the customer is done with fucking your mouth as he removes his dick then steps back a bit. He looks at you with a <<$charType>> appetite in his eyes.'
+	'It seems the customer is done with fucking your mouth as he removes his dick and steps back. He looks at you with a <<$charType>> appetite in his eyes.'
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		'"What should I do to you next, bitch?"'
 	else
 		'"So how do you want it next, slut?"'
 	end
-	'You are not entirely sure if he means that as a rhetorical question or not.'
+	'You''re not entirely sure if he means that as a rhetorical question or not.'
 
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		*nl
-		'You want to answer him, but the moment you open your mouth to talk he slaps your face very hard. This knocks you down to the cold floor. Tears erupt from your eyes in response.'
+		'You want to answer him, but the moment you open your mouth to talk he slaps your face very hard. This knocks you to the cold floor and tears erupt from your eyes in response.'
 		'"You thought I was actually interested in your opinion...<i>slave</i>?" he questions, laughing. "A bitch like you has no right to an opinion!"'
-		'You are unable to do anything except whimper like a small child. He ties you up, and you know that it''s going to get even worse now.'
+		'You''re unable to do anything except whimper like a small child. He ties you up, and you know that it''s going to get even worse now.'
 		vagOrAss = rand (0,1)
 		if vagOrAss = 0:
 			act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckRough'
@@ -643,19 +642,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-decide':
 	vagOrAss = rand (0, 1)
 	if vagOrAss = 1:
 		if $charType = 'sadistic':
-			'"I will fuck your cunt raw, bitch!"'
+			'"I''ll fuck your cunt raw, bitch!"'
 		 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckRough'
 		else
-			'"Let''s take your tender pussy!" he decides.'
+			'"Let''s take your tender pussy!"'
 		 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckNormal'
 		end
 	else
 		if $charType = 'sadistic':
-			'"I will fuck you deep in your ass, bitch!"'
+			'"I''ll fuck you deep in your ass, bitch!"'
 		 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough'
 		else
-			'"I want to see how tight your ass is." he says.'
-			 act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnal'
+			'"I want to see how tight your ass is."'
+			act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnal'
 		end		
 	end
 end
@@ -665,8 +664,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-beg':
 	minut += 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorebeg1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Please be kind to me sir. I''m so afraid and sore... Please!'
-	if dick >= 15:'"I''m very afraid of your <<$dick_girth>> penis sir!"'
+	'Please be gentle to me, sir! I''m so sore... Please!'
+	if dick >= 15:'"I''m scared of your dick, sir!"'
 	*nl
 	bekindChance = rand(1, 100)
 	endPunishment = 0
@@ -681,7 +680,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-beg':
 		endPunishment = 1
 		'"A slave has no right to ask what will happen to it!"'
 		hardChance = rand(1, 100)
-		'"I will fuck you however I want, so shut up bitch!"'
+		'"I''ll fuck you however I want, so shut up bitch!"'
 		if hardChance <= 50:
 			if vagOrAss = 0:	
 				act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckRough'
@@ -736,7 +735,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough':
 	'What comes next is an excruciatingly rough ass fucking that clearly shows he has no regard for all the pain you have to endure.'
 	*nl
 	if assDMG <= 0 :
-		'Fortunately, his <<$dick_girth>> dick is not enough to damage your anus and intestines. No more than usual, anyway.'
+		'Fortunately, his <<$dick_girth>> dick is not enough to cause you much pain. No more than usual, anyway.'
 		if buyout = 1:
 			act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumAss'
 		else
@@ -753,8 +752,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough':
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalDeep'
 	else
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is insanely big for you.'
-		'The tip of his cock repeatedly hits your intestinal walls and stretches your anus to insane proportions.'
-		'You will probably not be able to close your anus for a while.'
+		'The tip of his cock repeatedly hits your intestinal walls and stretches your anus wide.'
 		pain['asshole'] += assDMG
 		pain['tummy'] += assDMG
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -771,15 +769,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalDeep':
 	'His member is <<$dick_girth>> and your ass is unable to accommodate it.'
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		*nl
-		'But he doesn''t care, even though he is obviously aware, and he fucks you furiously hard.'
-		'"How do like my <<$dick_girth>> cock inside you bitch?"'
-		'"Is it deep enough for you, or should I push a bit more?"'
-		'Obviously, he''s enjoying this a lot. Doing this is probably the reason he came to this slave house.'
+		'He doesn''t care, even though he''s obviously aware, and fucks you furiously hard.'
+		'"How do like my <<$dick_girth>> cock inside you bitch? Is it deep enough for you, or should I push a bit more?"'
+		'He''s obviously enjoying this a lot.'
 		*nl
 	end
-	'With every stroke of his dick deep inside your intestines, you feel as if it''s your very stomach being poked by it.'
-	'A large bulge is noticeable every time he shoves it more than half the way inside you.'
-	*nl
+	'With every thrust of his dick deep inside your intestines, you feel as if it''s your very stomach being poked by it.'
+    *nl
 	if buyout = 1:
 		'After about a half an hour of deep anal banging, <<$bName>> is about to cum.'
 	else
@@ -787,7 +783,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalDeep':
 	end
 
 	if (endPunishment = 1 or $charType = 'sadistic') and buyout = 0:
-		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, you unruly anal slave."'
+		'"I''m going to feed you my cum now, you unruly anal slut!"'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
 	elseif buyout = 1:
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumAss'
@@ -803,13 +799,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckNormal':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefucknormal<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'The customer penetrates your pussy and fucks you.'
 	if vagDMG <= 0:
-		'He''s not gentle, but it isn''t a very rough fuck either.'
-		'You have no problems accommodating his <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
-		'At some moments, you almost seem to enjoy it.'
+		'He''s not gentle, but it isn''t very rough either.'
+		'You have no problems accommodating his <<$dick_girth>> dick. You almost seem to enjoy it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumGate'
 	elseif vagDMG <= 2:
-		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you, and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
+		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you, and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it slams against your vaginal walls.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'rough'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -833,7 +828,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckRough':
 	'The man takes you by your leash and positions your body as if it''s just meat to be used.'
 	'What comes next is an excruciatingly rough fuck that clearly shows he has no regard for all the pain you have to endure.'	
 	if vagDMG <= 0:
-		'Fortunately, his <<$dick_girth>> dick is not enough to damage your vagina. No more than usual, anyway.'
+		'Fortunately, his <<$dick_girth>> dick is not enough to cause you much pain. No more than usual, anyway.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound'
 		if $charType = 'sadistic':
 			act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
@@ -849,8 +844,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckRough':
 	else
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is insanely big for you.'
 		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix, or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
-		'He notices this too, realizing it''s why you''re groaning so loudly.'
-		'Enjoying your suffering, he pushes his dick even deeper inside, and you squeal like a pig.'
+		'He notices this too, realizing it''s why you''re groaning so loudly. Enjoying your suffering, he pushes his dick even deeper inside, and you squeal like a pig.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG * 2
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG * 2
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'rough'
@@ -868,20 +862,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckDeep':
 	'His member is <<$dick_girth>> and your vagina is unable to accommodate it.'
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		*nl
-		'But he doesn''t care about that, even though he is obviously aware of it, and fucks you furiously hard.'
-		'"How do like my <<$dick_girth>> cock inside you bitch?"'
-		'"Is it deep enough for you, or should I push a bit more?"'
-		'"Do you feel me entering your cervix?"'
-		'Obviously he''s enjoying this a lot. Doing this is probably the reason he came to this slave house.'
+		'He doesn''t care about that, even though he is obviously aware of it, and fucks you furiously hard.'
+		'"How do like my <<$dick_girth>> cock inside you bitch? Is it deep enough for you, or should I push a bit more? Do you feel me entering your cervix?"'
+		'He''s obviously enjoying this a lot.'
 		*nl
 	end
-	'With every stroke of his dick deep inside your vagina, you feel as if it''s your very cervix being penetrated.'
-	'A large bulge is noticeable every time he shoves it more than half the way inside you.'
-	*nl
+	'With every thrust of his dick deep inside your vagina, you feel as if it''s your very cervix being penetrated.'
 	'After about half an hour of deep vaginal banging, the man is about to cum.'
 	
 	if endPunishment = 1 or $charType = 'sadistic':
-		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, you unruly fuck slave."'
+		'"I''m going to feed you my cum now, you unruly fuck slave!"'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
 	else
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumGate'
@@ -890,21 +880,19 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumGate':
 	if endPunishment = 1:
-		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, you unruly slave."'
+		'"I''m going to feed you my cum now, you unruly slave!"'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
 	elseif buyout = 1:
-		'"You will be filled with my seed for the first time, so be sure to cherish the memory of this moment!"'
+		'"You''re going to be filled with my seed for the first time, so be sure to cherish the memory of this moment!"'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumAss'		
 	else
 		'"So where do you want it, bitch?"'
-		
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
-		
-		act 'Ask him to cum on your face':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumFace'
+		act 'On your face':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumFace'
 		
 		gs 'willpower', 'cum_inside', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-			act 'Ask him to cum inside your pussy (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+			act 'Inside your pussy (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 				gs 'willpower', 'cum_inside', 'self'
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -912,12 +900,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumGate':
 				gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumPussy'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Ask him to cum inside your pussy (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Inside your pussy (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 		
 		gs 'willpower', 'cum_inside_anal', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-			act 'Ask him to cum inside your ass (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+			act 'Inside your ass (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 				gs 'willpower', 'cum_inside_anal', 'self'
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -925,12 +913,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumGate':
 				gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumAss'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Ask him to cum inside your ass (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Inside your ass (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 		
 		gs 'willpower', 'swallow', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-			act 'Ask him to cum into your mouth (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+			act 'In your mouth (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 				gs 'willpower', 'swallow', 'self'
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -938,7 +926,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumGate':
 				gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumMouth'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Ask him to cum into your mouth (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'In your mouth (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	end
 end
@@ -946,13 +934,13 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cum':
 	cumRand = rand(1,100)
 	if cumRand > 75 and cumRand <= 100:
-		'He decides to cum inside your vagina.'
+		'He decides to cum inside your pussy.'
 		act 'Endure it':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumPussy'
 	elseif cumRand > 50 and cumRand <= 75:
 		'He decides to cum inside your ass.'
 		act 'Endure it':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumAss'
 	elseif cumRand > 25 and cumRand <= 50:
-		'He decides to cum into your mouth.'
+		'He decides to cum in your mouth.'
 		act 'Endure it':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumMouth'
 	else
 		'He decides to cum on your face.'
@@ -964,32 +952,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumPussy':
 	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumpussy<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if vagDMG > 0:
-		'As he delivers his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside your vagina, you can feel the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock at your cervix and even a bit inside it.'
-		'His bursting cum penetrates through the cervix directly into your womb, which causes a warm, yet painful sensation to flow through you.'
+		'As he pumps his cum into your vagina, you feel the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock at your cervix and even inside it.'
+		'His cum penetrates through the cervix directly into your womb, which causes a warm, yet painful sensation to flow through you.'
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
 	*nl
 	if cumVol = 3:
-		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried inside your pussy, the customer delivers his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm inside you.'
-		'When he pulls it out, some of the sperm drips out of your cunt.'
+		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried inside your pussy, the customer pumps his cum inside you.'
+		'When he pulls out, some of it drips out of you.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
-		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried deep inside your pussy, his tip touches your cervix.'
-		'He pumps your vagina full of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm.'
-		'As he pulls his cock out, a large portion of the cum forcefully squirts out of you.'
+		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried deep inside your pussy, his tip touches your cervix as he pumps your pussy full of his cum.'
+		'As he pulls his cock out, a large amount of the cum forcefully squirts out of you.'
 	elseif cumVol >= 5:
-		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried very deep inside your pussy, his tip pushes against your cervix and even slides inside of it a bit.'
-		'Then, as he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside you, a lot of it goes directly to your womb.'
-		'It feels painful, but the warm sensation is weird and nothing like what you have felt before.'
-		'You feel as if your inner parts are stretching from the <<$cumType>> amount of cum being pumped into you.'
-		*nl
-		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably.'
-		'The customer looks at it with joy then punches at your bulge with his fist.'
-		'The cum bursts out of your pussy as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
+		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried very deep inside your pussy, his tip pushes against your cervix and even slides inside a little.'
+		'As he pumps his cum inside you, a lot of it shoots directly into your womb. It feels painful, but the warm sensation is nothing like what you''ve felt before.'
+		'When he pulls his cock out, his cum squirts out of your pussy.'
 		pain['cervix'] += 20
 		pain['tummy'] += 40
 	else
-		'The customer cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small part of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm drips out of your pussy.'
+		'The customer cums inside you. When he pulls his cock out, his cum slowly drips out of your pussy.'
 	end
 
 	pcs_vag += 1
@@ -1004,9 +986,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumass<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if assDMG > 0:
-		'As he cums inside your ass, you can feel his <<$dick_girth>> cock slamming against your intestinal wall.'
-		'A moving bulge is visible on your otherwise flat stomach as his dick moves inside you.'
-		'His cum fills you, and it feels as if it has flowed right up to your stomach.'
+		'You can feel his <<$dick_girth>> cock slamming against your intestinal wall as he cums inside your ass.'
+		'His cum fills you, and feels as if it''s flowed right up to your stomach.'
 		pain['asshole'] += assDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -1014,38 +995,35 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 	if cumVol = 3:
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried in your intestines.'
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
+			'As <<$bName>> shoots his load, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
 		else
-			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
+			'As he shoots his load, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
 		end
-		'After his dick is removed, some of the sperm drips out of your gaping hole.'
+		'He pulls out and his cum slowly drips from your gaping hole.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines, sometimes even hitting your intestinal walls.'
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside, you can feel your stomach grow larger...'
+			'As <<$bName>> shoots his load, you can feel a wamth spread inside you...'
 		else
-			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside, the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably...'
+			'As he shoots his load, you can feel a warmth spread inside you...'
 		end
-		'You feel very full, even after he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> dick out of you.'
-		'After a few seconds, a large portion of his <<$cumType>> amount of cum spurts out of you, as if from a garden hose.'
+		'He pulls out and his cum squirts out of your gaping hole.'
 	elseif cumVol >= 5:
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>>''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines, with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
+			'<<$bName>>''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines, with each thrust forcfully hitting your intestinal walls.'
 		else
-			'The customer''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines, with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
+			'The customer''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines, with each thrust forcefully hitting your intestinal walls.'
 		end
-		'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines with a <<$cumType>> amount of cum.'
+		'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines full of cum.'
 		*nl
-		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably.'
-		'He looks at the bulge with joy then punches at it with his fist.'
-		'The cum bursts out of your anus as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
+		'When he pulls his cock out, cum squirts out of your ravaged anus.'
 		pain['tummy'] += 20
 		gs 'stat'
 	else
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>> cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small amount of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm leaks out of your gaping anus.'
+			'<<$bName>> cums inside you. When he pulls his cock out, his cum slowly leaks out of your gaping anus.'
 		else
-			'The customer cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small amountt of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm leaks out of your gaping anus.'
+			'The customer cums inside you. When he pulls his cock out, his cum slowly leaks out of your gaping anus.'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -1071,27 +1049,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumMouth':
 	i = rand(1, 5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecummouth<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if throatDMG > 0:
-		'Your aching throat is penetrated again.'
-		'He buries his <<$dick_girth>> cock to the hilt inside you.'
-		'While he''s cumming directly down your gullet, you can feel the pulsing of his member. It painfully stretches your already sore throat.'
+		'Your aching throat is penetrated again as he buries his <<$dick_girth>> cock to the hilt inside you.'
+		'When he shoots his load, you feel his member painfully stretching your already sore throat.'
 		pain['throat'] += throatDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
 	
 	if cumVol = 3:
-		'His <<$cumType>> amount of cum fills your gullet.'
+		'His cum fills your throat.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
-		'His <<$cumType>> amount of cum fills your gullet and drips down into your stomach.'
+		'His cum fills your throat and trickles down into your stomach.'
 		'You feel very full and bloated.'
 		pcs_energy += 50
 		pcs_hydra += 40
 	elseif cumVol => 5:
-		'You are being pumped like a water bag. His <<$cumType>> amount of jizz fills your stomach and gullet.'
+		'You''re being pumped full of cum like a slut. He completely fills your stomach and throat.'
 		'You probably won''t need another meal today...'
 		pcs_energy += 100
 		pcs_hydra += 90
 	else
-		'The customer shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside your mouth and down your gullet.'
+		'The customer shoots his cum into your mouth and down your throat.'
 	end
 
 	mouth += 1
@@ -1107,17 +1084,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumFace':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumface<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'He takes his <<$dick_girth>> dick and points it towards your face.'
 	if cumVol = 3:
-		'A <<$cumType>> amount of sperm lands all over your face.'
+		'A <<$cumType>> amount of cum lands all over your face.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
-		'A <<$cumType>> amount of sperm lands all over your face, some even lands in your eyes and hair.'
+		'A <<$cumType>> amount of cum lands all over your face. Some even lands in your hair.'
 	elseif cumVol => 5:
-		'A <<$cumType>> amount of sperm lands all over your face. In your eyes, hair, everywhere.'
-		'There is so much cum that you have a solid layer on your face, as if you were wearing a cosmetic mask.'
+		'A <<$cumType>> amount of cum lands all over your face and hair.'
+		'There''s so much that you have a solid layer covering your face.'
 	else
-		'A <<$cumType>> cum volume is spread around your mouth and cheeks.'
+		'A <<$cumType>> amount of cum is splattered across your face and in your mouth.'
 	end
 
-	'The customer seems content with his creation and looks at you with a weird satisfaction.'
+	'The customer seems content and looks at you in satisfaction.'
 
 	mouth += 1
 	gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'customer'
@@ -1129,23 +1106,22 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-end':
 	if endPunishment = 1:
-		'The customer goes to the bathroom and then calls for your master.'
+		'The customer goes to the bathroom before calling for your master.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-endPunishment'
 	elseif buyout = 1:
 		'<<$bName>> leaves you lying on the ground, his cum still dripping out of your ass, and calls for your master.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-endPunishment'
 	else
-		'The customer goes to the bathroom, and you are immediately lead back to the basement.'
+		'The customer goes to the bathroom, and you are immediately taken back to the basement.'
 		act 'Go back':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-endPunishment':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/kneelingslave1.jpg"></center>'
-	iif(buyout = 1, $bName, 'The customer') + ' tells your master how unruly you were and that further training should be applied to you.'
-	'He then leaves.'
+	iif(buyout = 1, $bName, 'The customer') + ' tells your master how unruly you were and that further training should be applied to you before he leaves.'
 	'Kneeling, you look up at your master only to see his grim face. You can tell something bad will happen.'
-	act 'Be led back to the basement':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomer'
+	act 'Back to the basement':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomer'
 end
 
 --- abductionCustomer ---------------------------------

locations/gschool_jock_chats.qsrc

@@ -497,16 +497,57 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina':
 			AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2
 			gs 'npc_relationship', 'set', 'A23', '100'
 			gs 'stat'
-			'Albina smiles gratefully at you. "I just wanted to thank you again <<$pcs_nickname>>. There''s some stupid shit about ''a friend in need'' or something. I''m letting you know that I''m disbanding the Starlets as well. Too many bad memories you know?"'
-			'You tell her you understand and she embraces you in a tight hug before composing herself, staring down anyone looking at her with a cold glare.'
-		elseif AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2:
-			'You have a pleasant conversation with Albina where you both talk about almost anything, but you''re careful not to bring up her father, the Starlets or anything else that might upset her. The conversation ends with Albina embracing you in a tight and extended hug.'
+			if npc_sex['A23'] = 1:
+				'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>," Albina smiles at you. "I wanted to thank you again for what you did. I don''t want to get into any mushy bullshit, but I just wanted to let you know I... <i>appreciated</i> it." Her eyes drift down between your legs and she winks at you while giving her lips a subtle lick. "It meant a lot."'
+			else
+				'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, "Albina smiles at you. "I wanted to thank you again for what you did. I don''t want to get into any mushy bullshit, but I just wanted to let you know I appreciated it. It meant a lot."'
+			end
+			'"It was no problem Albina. You''re my friend. That''s what friends do," you say.'
+			'She smiles. "Also, I''m disbanding the Starlets," she says. "Too many bad memories you know?"'
+			'"I get it."'
+			'Albina embraces you in a tight hug before giving you a quick smile and continuing down the hall.'
+		elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 250:
+			if AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2:
+				'"Hey Al-"'
+				if rand(0,1) = 1:
+					'"Hey <i>whore</i>!" a random boy shouts at you from a group passing by. "I got 50<b>₽</b> in my locker! That''s enough to fuck your slutty ass, right?" His friends cackle at you as he makes a rude gesture and grins at you.'
+					'One glare from Albina is all it takes for their expressions to change and send them packing.'
+				else
+					'"Fucking all the boys isn''t enough for you?" a random girl sneers at you from a group passing by. "Trying to get into Albina''s panties too?"'
+					'"I don''t know why she bothers," another girl says. "She probably gives them a strapon to take it up her ass anyways!"'
+					'The rest of the girls giggle until they see Albina''s glare and quickly scurry away.'
+				end
+				'She sighs as she turns back to you.'
+				*nl
+				'"I told you to be careful..." she says and places her hand on your cheek. She lingers there for just a moment before turning away, a sorry look in her eyes is the last thing you see before she leaves.'
+			else
+				'"Hey Alb-"'
+				'"Ew! Get away from me you walking cum dumpster!" Albina sneers and forcefully shoves you backwards. "I don''t want to catch AIDS or some other shit! God, I feel dirty just touching your clothes!"'
+				'She walks away with a huff, several of your classmates going with her.'
+			end
 		elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 150:
-			if npc_rel['A23'] >= 70:
-				'Albina just stares at you in disbelief. "There''s some <i>nasty</i> rumors about you going around school. Everyone is saying that you''re a cock hungry whore! How can you live like that - just letting guys... use you like that?"'
-				'You''re about to speak up, but she shakes her head and walks away. You can''t tell if she was feeling disgusted or disappointed at you. She might even have been both.'
+			if AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2:
+				'"Hey Albina!" you wave.'
+				'Albina suddenly grabs you by the arm and yanks you over to the side of the hallway.'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>!" she hisses in a hushed tone. "There are some <i>nasty</i> fucking rumors going around about you! Everything from cock hungry slut to a straight up hooker! I don''t know what''s going on but... be careful, okay?"'
+				'"They''re just rumors Albina," you try to reassure her.'
+				'"They don''t sound like <i>just</i> rumors <<$pcs_nickname>>..." She glares at you for a moment before sighing. "Look, I''m not trying to slut shame you or anything like that. I know I''m not one to talk. But seriously, be careful okay?"'
+				'She gives you a worried look and hugs you tight before you part ways for your next class.'
+			elseif npc_rel['A23'] >= 70:
+				'Albina just stares at you in disbelief. "There''s some <i>nasty</i> rumors about you going around school. Everyone is saying that you''re a cock hungry whore! How can you live like that - just letting guys... <i>use</i> you like that?"'
+				'You try to respond, but she shakes her head and walks away. You can''t tell if she was feeling disgusted or disappointed at you. She might even have been both.'
+			else
+				'You approach Albina but before you can even say anything, she holds up her hand and sticks out her tongue in a gagging motion.'
+				'"Ugh, that''s far enough slut! I can smell the cum on your breath from here! Why are you dragging your dirty whore ass over to me? Even if I had a cock between my legs for you to suck, I wouldn''t want your filthy cum breath all over it. Now fuck off before I throw up!"'
+			end
+		elseif fame['pav_slut'] >= 75:
+			if AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2:
+				'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''ve been hearing some weird rumors about you lately," Albina says with a bemused look. "Everyone''s saying you''re ''easy'' and suck dick in the boys bathroom! I don''t know what''s going on but... be careful, okay?"'
+				'"They''re just rumors Albina," you try to reassure her.'
+				'"This might end up worse than you think..." she says with a worried look before walking away.'
 			else
-				'Albina scowls at you before gagging. "Ugh, that''s far enough slut! I can smell the cum on your breath from here! Why are you dragging your dirty whore ass over to me? Even if I had a cock between my legs for you to suck, I wouldn''t want your filthy cum breath all over it. Now fuck off before I throw up!"'
+				'Albina just stares at you in disbelief. "There''s some <i>nasty</i> rumors about you going around school. Everyone is saying you''re a cock hungry whore! How can you live like that - just letting guys... use you like that?"'
+				'You are about to speak up, but she shakes her head and walks away. You can''t tell if she was feeling disgusted or disappointed at you. She might even have been both.'
 			end
 		elseif grupTipe = 1:
 			if npc_rel['A23'] >= 70:

locations/pav_beach_chat.qsrc

@@ -252,7 +252,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/christina/beach_chat.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk over to Christina, where she lays on the beach getting a tan. Before you can even say a word she speaks up. "I am having a good day, go away before you ruin it or I will ruin your day." You sigh, and turn around and walk away from her. It seems she will never forgive you.'
+	'You walk over to Christina as she lays on the beach getting a tan. Before you can even say a word, she speaks up. "I''m having a good day, so go away before you ruin it or I''ll ruin your day." You sigh before turning and walking away. It seems she''ll never forgive you.'
 	act 'Talk to someone else': gt 'pav_beach_chat', 'beach_hangout'
 end