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      locations/albinahome.qsrc

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locations/AlbStars.qsrc

@@ -1,11 +1,7 @@
 # AlbStars
 !2020/11/16
-!! Replacement file that merges the AlbStarsWhore file and the Starlets section in "gdksport". Deletion of both (as well as AlbinaEv and AlbStarsEnd) and updating triggers in "gdksport" to redirect to this file is required.
-!! If possible, a virginty check when Sveta joins since one of these guys popping her cherry isn't going to be pleasant and Albina cares too much to allow it to happen. (i.e, a virgin Sveta can't do the whoring part)
-!! Simplify Sveta cleaning herself up when she is finished with a client to a "clean all" command (except for event 6)
-!! Pain coded for anal and orgasm denial coded into whore event 6.
 
-! If Sveta is not a cool kid or jock
+!! If Sveta is not a cool kid or jock
 if $ARGS[0] = 'albina1':
 	menu_off = 1
 	*clr & cla
@@ -199,7 +195,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina4':
 	end
 end
 
-!! Check that I have not broken anything creating this new act. 	
 if $ARGS[0] = 'albina5':
 	menu_off = 1
 	*clr & cla
@@ -524,12 +519,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore1':
 				cls
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/smroom/event/rought/dog1.mp4"></video></center>'
 				'The man climbs in behind you. He spreads your ass and you feel him spit on your anus before pressing his cock against it.'
-                'You let out a pained squeal and thrash your legs as he pushes his entire length deep into your unprepared ass. As he roughly and painfully grinds in and out of your hole, he reaches forward and starts pulling on your mouth with his fingers. After a few minutes, he removes his fingers, only to stuff your panties in your mouth and pin your arms behind your back before he leans in close to your ear.'
+                'You let out a pained squeal and thrash your legs as he pushes his entire length deep into your unprepared ass. As he roughly and painfully grinds in and out of your hole, he reaches forward and starts pulling on your mouth with his fingers. After a few minutes, he removes his fingers, only to stuff your panties into your mouth and use his tie to tightly bind your arms behind your back, leaving you at his mercy. He then leans in close to your ear.'
                 '"Yeah, keep squirming like that bitch! It just makes you tighter!" Muffled by your panties, you whimper in distress at the pain he is inflicting on you, but he just laughs and fucks you even harder.'
                 *nl				
-				'After what feels like an eternity, you feel his cock twitching inside you and a warmth floods your ass. He pulls out and a sticky mix of cum and saliva trickles from your ravaged anus, which throbs in immense pain.'
-				'"Only that cute little head dancer has ever taken it in the ass better than you, whore. All the other bitches just cry." You let out a loud yelp as he finishes with a stinging smack on your ass that echoes into the room. You glance back and see a bright red handprint imprinted on your ass cheek.'
-				'To your despair and disgust, he drags you up next to him and forces you to lie on your side next to him with your ass hanging out, his sweaty, flabby arm wrapped around your back as he squeezes and slaps your ass while bragging on his phone to his friend about "some of the best anal" he''s ever had. This post sex torture finally ends 10 minutes later.'
+				'After what feels like an eternity, he pulls out and you think he''s done, but you whimper when he drags you to the side of the bed and pushes your legs up to your chest, giving him better access to the asshole. You let out a muffled yelp as he painfully thrusts back into your hole and resumes the merciless ass fucking, sadistic grin on his face. Tears start streaming from your eyes as you are forced to lie there and take it. You again lose track of time before you feel him pull out again and flip you onto your stomach, forcing you to bend over onto the bed. You relax your anus as best as you can, but it''s still incredibily painful when he penetrates you and resumes fucking you.'  
+				'You''re wondering how long this is going to last when you suddenly feel him twitching inside you and a warmth floods your ass as he groans loudly in pleasure. He pulls out and a sticky mix of cum and saliva trickles from your ravaged anus, which throbs in immense pain.'
+				'"Only that cute little head dancer has ever taken it in the ass better than you, whore. All the other bitches just cry." You let out a muffled scream and sob as he finishes with a stinging smack on your ass that echoes into the room. You glance back and see a bright red handprint imprinted on your ass cheek.'
+				'He unties your sore wrists and you spit out your saliva drenched panties, but to your despair and disgust, he drags you up next to him and forces you to lie on your side next to him with your ass hanging out, his sweaty, flabby arm wrapped around your back as he squeezes and slaps your ass while bragging on his phone to his friend about "the best anal he''s ever had." This post sex torture finally ends 10 minutes later.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal', 30, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 				gs 'pain', 2, 'mouth', 'pull' 
 				gs 'pain', 2, 'asshole', 'stretch'
@@ -548,11 +544,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore1':
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/smroom/event/rought/miss1.mp4"></video></center>'
 				'The man moves in, roughly flips you on your back and spreads your legs. "This pussy looks like it will be worth every ruble!" You feel the tip of his cock spread your labia apart as he pushes into you.'
 				'He grabs your throat and pins you to the bed as he starts to very roughly pound your pussy. He occasionally uses his other hand to very tightly squeeze and twist your nipple, making you squeal in pain. He seems to enjoy treating you this roughly.'
-                'You panic when he stops thrusting and tightens his grip around your neck. You choke as you thrash your arms and legs in distress, but he just smiles and doesn''t loosen his grip until you are on the verge of blacking out. He then resumes fucking you, faster and seemingly closer to climax.'  
+                'You panic when he stops thrusting and tightens his grip around your neck. You choke as you thrash your arms and legs in distress, but he just smiles and doesn''t loosen his grip until you are on the verge of blacking out. He then resumes fucking you, faster and seemingly closer to climax, as you clutch your neck and gasp for air.'  
 				*nl
-				'You endure the remainder of the rough sex for what feels like an eternity, but he eventually lets go of you and pulls out. He starts jerking his cock and you feel his cum splattering onto your labia.'
-                'He is annoyed at not being able to finish inside you. "A waste of a good fucking pussy if you can''t cum inside it I say, especially when it''s hot little numbers like you." he crudly remarks before climbing off of you. "That cute little head dancer is just begging for me to fill her smooth, tight as a vice fuck hole again, but he almost killed me for doing it once already." he adds.'
-				'To your despair and disgust, he drags you up next to him and forces you into his now sweaty embrace, his flabby arm wrapped around your neck as he fondles and squeezes your breast while bragging on his phone to his friend about "the fine little pussy" he just fucked. This post sex torture finally ends 10 minutes later.'				
+				'After a few more minutes, he pulls out and flips you over before pulling you up onto your knees, your ass in the air. He slides back inside your pussy and starts pounding you doggystyle as he slaps and squeezes your ass. You are forced to endure this for what feels like an eternity before he suddenly pulls out and you feel his cum splattering onto your labia and asshole.'
+                'He is annoyed at not being able to finish inside you. "A waste of a good fucking pussy if you can''t cum inside it I say, especially when it''s hot little numbers like you." he crudly remarks. "That cute little head dancer is just begging for me to fill her smooth, tight as a vice fuck hole again, but he almost killed me for doing it once already." he adds.'
+				'To your despair and disgust, he drags you up next to him and forces you into his now sweaty embrace, his flabby arm wrapped around your neck as he fondles and squeezes your breast while bragging on his phone to his friend about "the fine little pussy" he just fucked and he "should come and sample it." This post sex torture finally ends 10 minutes later.'				
 				gs 'pain', 2, 'throat', 'choke'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 				gs 'cum_call', 'precum', $AlbinaQW['Cust']
@@ -569,7 +565,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore1':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'whore2':
-	minut += 60
+	minut += 30
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'the Armenian', rand(18,32)
 	$AlbinaQW['Cust'] = $npclastgenerated
 	gs 'boyStat', $AlbinaQW['Cust']
@@ -715,7 +711,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore2':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
-	minut += 60
+	minut += 30
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'the man', rand(18,23)
 	$AlbinaQW['Cust'] = $npclastgenerated
 	gs 'boyStat', $AlbinaQW['Cust']
@@ -846,7 +842,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'whore4':
-	minut += 60
+	minut += 40
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'the man', rand(18,32)
 	$AlbinaQW['Cust'] = $npclastgenerated
 	$npc_thdick[$AlbinaQW['Cust']] = 'massive'
@@ -978,7 +974,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore4':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'whore5':
-	minut += 60
+	minut += 40
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'the man', rand(18,32)
 	$AlbinaQW['Cust'] = $npclastgenerated
 	$npc_thdick[$AlbinaQW['Cust']] = 'massive'
@@ -1135,7 +1131,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore5':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'whore6':
-	minut += 60
+	minut += 30
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'the man', rand(24,40)
 	$AlbinaQW['Cust'] = $npclastgenerated
 	gs 'boyStat', $AlbinaQW['Cust']

+ 11 - 10
locations/albinahome.qsrc

@@ -15,7 +15,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if AlbinaQW['albride'] = 1:
 		AlbinaQW['albride'] = 2
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinahome1.jpg"></center>'
-		'Albina leads you to the sitting room and disappears into the kitchen. While she is gone, her phone vibrates on the table. You look and see that "Mother" is trying to call her. "Strange. She''s never mentioned her mother. Hell, she barely talks about her father." you think to yourself.'
+		'Albina leads you to the sitting room and disappears into the kitchen. While she is gone, her phone vibrates on the table. You look and see that "Mama" is trying to call her. "Strange. She''s never mentioned her mother. Hell, she barely talks about her father." you think to yourself.'
 		'The phone rings out as Albina returns with a bottle of wine and two glasses. She places them on the table and notices her missed call. She frantically picks her phone up and types a message before stuffing it in her pocket, giving you a weak smile. "Don''t worry about who that was <<$pcs_firstname>>."'
 		act 'Drink':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'wine'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinahome1.jpg"></center>'
-			'"This is, <i>was</i>, was one of my father''s favourite things. A bottle of stupidly expensive wine that he always refused to open. So let''s fucking open it!" she says as she pours the contents into the glasses and hands you one before sitting down next to you.'
+			'"This is, <i>was</i>, one of my father''s favourite things. A bottle of stupidly expensive wine that he always refused to open. So let''s fucking open it!" she says as she pours the contents into the glasses and hands you one before sitting down next to you.'
 			'She raises her glass as a wide smile beams across her face. "He''s gone! He''s finally gone!"'
 			'She swiftly drinks all of her wine. "He was going down hard. I''ve been gathering evidence for years. All his emails, text messages, phone calls and witnesses all proving what a scumbag he is. I finally gathered enough to take him down!"'
 			act 'Ask how her father reacted':
@@ -45,9 +45,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/comfort.jpg"></center>'
 					'"What are you talking about?" you ask, startled by her outburst. Albina looks up at you meekly as tears well up in her eyes.'
 					'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, my father has abused me since my mother left when I was young. My father never wanted a child and made no effort to bond with me, but he''s an asshole and used his connections to stop my mother taking me away with her when she divorced him." she tearfully admits.'
-					'"My mother is much younger than my father, but he charmed her with empty promises and offered to pay for her tution since she wanted to be a psychologist. While she''s struggling to juggle studying and raising their baby daughter, he''s off having some 19 year old gold digging whore suck his dick. It was his fault she left, but he blamed me and made sure I suffered for it with years of bullying and emotional abuse."'
+					'It was his fault she left him, but he blamed me and made sure I suffered for it with years of bullying and emotional abuse."'
 					*nl
-					'But now that he''s going down, she''s come back to live with and look after me. She got herself a job at a hospital in the city and is helping me process everything going on in my mind. She''s always checking up on me since she''s on edge about what my father can do, even in prison."'
+					'Now that he''s going down, she''s come back to look after me and help me deal with everything. She''s always checking up on me since she''s on edge about what my father can do, even in prison."'
 					'She continues. "The truth is his political campaign never took off. He loved abusing his position as a cop to bully others, especially me, but when he retired, he didn''t have that power anymore. A political career was his chance to get that back."'
 					'"Nobody was willing to back him however, and that''s when his abuse went beyond simply being emotional." She stops talking for a few seconds and you can clearly see her hands shaking. "That''s when... that''s when he decided to... whore me out to his friends. For ''a bit of fun'' with me, they would ''donate'' to his campaign fund.". She is on the verge of bursting into tears in front of you.'
 
@@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						'"I was forced to let those fucking perverts do whatever they pleased with my friends <<$pcs_nickname>>! They were humiliated, abused and degraded for some fucking rubles! Rubles that the fucking bastard spent on his own whores that he mistreated instead of his campaign!"'
                         !! if virgin or not
 						if pcs_vag = 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0: 
-						'"That''s why I didn''t get you involved. Too many girls have to hide the fact that those bastards were their first time. I wasn''t going to let it happen again. But what he did to me..." Tears are streaming down her cheeks at this point.'
+						'"That''s why I didn''t get you involved. Too many girls have to hide the fact that those bastards were their first time. I wasn''t going to let it happen again with you. But what he did to me..." Tears are streaming down her cheeks at this point.'
 						else 
 						'"Then you joined and my father forced me to put you to work as well. Of course, all those nasty creeps jumped at the chance to try out the ''new girl'' once they found out about you. But what he did to me..." Tears are streaming down her cheeks at this point.'
 						end
@@ -74,8 +74,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							'"What did he do?" you ask.'
 							'"It was bad enough being forced to whore out my friends to abusive creeps who almost choked them to death, but... but..."'
 							'"But what?" you ask softly. She steels herself before answering you. "If I didn''t get the girl the guys wanted, my father said it was perfectly fine for them to take me and do what they wanted, even rape me." she cries.'
-							'"They would take their anger at not getting the girl they wanted out on me. I would be choked, slapped, even spat on! Some nights, I''d come home and he would berate me for not ''helping his donors'' and I would be subjected to his abuse as well. Other times, he would bring his friends home and let them have their way with me. One guy or four, he didn''t care what they done to me so long as they paid.'
-							'"My father abusing me my entire life while running a prostitution ring where my friends were subjected to abusive sexual exploitation... and I... I couldn''t do anything about it!" The words barely make it out of her mouth before she bursts into a flood of tears.'
+							'"They would take their anger at not getting the girl they wanted out on me. I would be choked, slapped, even spat on! Some nights, I''d come home and he would berate me for not ''helping his donors'' and I would be subjected to his abuse as well. Other times, he would bring his friends home and let them have their way with me. One guy or four, he didn''t care what they done to me so long as they paid.' 
+							'"That fat and disgusting Armenian pervert visited often. One time, he choked me unconscious so he could cum inside me, and when I awoke and realised what he had done, I started panicking about getting pregnant. That''s when I heard my asshole father downstairs arguing with him about what effect a pregnant teenage daughter would have on his campaign. My wellbeing was of no concern to him, but luckily, I was on the pill for this sort of thing happening. It did spook him into making a strict rule to pull out though."'
+							'She turns and looks directly into your eyes, tears running down her cheeks. "So yeah, my father abused me while running an underage prostitution ring where me and my friends were subjected to abusive sexual exploitation... and I... I couldn''t do anything about it!" The words barely make it out of her mouth before she bursts into a flood of tears.'
 
 							act 'Comfort her':
 								*clr & cla
@@ -96,10 +97,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 										gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'wine'
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/comfort1.jpg"></center>'
-										'You pull away from her, not wanting to kiss her. "Sorry I just..." She jumps back from you, almost falling from the sofa.'
-										'"Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I don''t know what came over me! It''s just... I''ve suffered a lot at the hands of men, so I enjoy seeking... female comfort, if you know what I mean..." You don''t want to kiss her, but she clearly needs reassurance. You place her head on your shoulder and gently stroke her hair for the next few minutes.'
+										'You pull away from her, not wanting to kiss her. "Sorry I just..."' 
+										'She jumps back from you, almost falling from the sofa. "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I don''t know what came over me! It''s just... I''ve suffered a lot at the hands of men, so I enjoy seeking... female comfort at times, if you know what I mean..." You don''t want to kiss her, but she clearly needs reassurance. You place her head on your shoulder and gently stroke her hair for the next few minutes.'
 										'She seems to appreciate this and sits up. "I should really get going." you say and Albina nods her head in understanding. "I''ll see you later, okay?" you reassure her.'
-										'She smiles at you. "Of course and... thank you <<$pcs_nickname>>. It was nice to just let this all out. I''m glad I can call you my friend." You smile at her and start leaving when she runs up and embraces you in a tight hug before walking you to the door.'
+										'She smiles at you. "Of course and... thank you <<$pcs_nickname>>. It was nice to just let this all out. I''m glad I can call you my friend." You smile at her and start leaving when she runs up and embraces you in a tight hug that''s entirely uncharacteristic of her before walking you to the door.'
 
 										act 'Continue':gt 'pav_residential'
 									end