[text edit] From Karma

locations/korr.qsrc

@@ -29,7 +29,7 @@ act '</b>Go to the stairwell</b>':
 		'<b><font color="red">You need to get dressed before going out.</font></b>'
 		xgt $curloc
 	elseif sick > 72:
-		'<b><font color="red">You''re too sick to walk around in the streets.</font></b>'
+		'<b><font color="red">You''re too sick to leave home.</font></b>'
 		xgt $curloc
 	else
 		xgt 'etoexhib', 'pos51'
@@ -70,7 +70,7 @@ gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 
 if remkorr = 0:
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/korr.jpg"></center>'
-	'In the hallway wallpaper which where moved away from the walls, and has long faded. A <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a> hangs on the wall.'
+	'In the hallway the wallpaper is somewhere detached from the walls and anyway from long time faded. A <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a> hangs on the wall.'
 else
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/korr2.jpg"></center>'
 	'Modern hall with stylish furniture, a wall-mounted <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>.'
@@ -78,20 +78,20 @@ end
 
 if umbrella > 0:'On a hook hangs an umbrella.'
 
-if krolik = 1:'Resting on the floor your rabbit <a href="exec:gt ''krol'', ''start''"><<$namekrol>></a>.'
+if krolik = 1:'Resting on the floor there''s your rabbit <a href="exec:gt ''krol'', ''start''"><<$namekrol>></a>.'
 if popugai = 1:'In the cage sits your parrot <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$namepopu>></a>.'
 
 if parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 1:
 	parkblackmail = 2
 	parkday = daystart
-	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it you can see pictures in it. Damn, it''s pictures of you where you are giving blowjobs to two guys in the park.'
-	'Small note says:'
-	'If you do not want to have these pictures posted on your porch and sent to your work, come to this address (address listed is a Studio)'
-	'PS, if you do not come today, these pictures will be hanging in your entryway tomorrow.'
+	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it you find several pictures inside. Shit! Are pictures of you giving blowjobs to two guys in the park.'
+	'A small note accompanying them says:'
+	'If you do not want these pictures to posted on your porch and sent to your work place, come to this address (address listed is a Studio)'
+	'PS, if you do not come today, these pictures will be hanging in your entrance hall tomorrow.'
 elseif parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 2:
 	parkblackmail = 0
 	fotoyousuck = 1
-	'Damn, your photos with sperm on your face and two dicks in your mouth are plastered around porch.'
+	'Oh shit! Photos of you with your face covered in sperm and two dicks in your mouth are covering your entrance hall walls.'
 end
 
 !!if rand (0,2) ! 0:gs 'din_bad' & dynamic $mobile_check
@@ -102,14 +102,14 @@ if hour >= 9 and hour <= 20 and santehnikDolg > 0 and money >= santehnikDolg:
 	act 'Go to the door':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You go to the door and look through the peephole. You see a dark male figure. Apparently the man heard you and says through the door. "It''s me. Plumber Grisha. You owe me money, remember?"'
+		'You go to the door and look through the peephole. You see a dark male figure. Apparently the man heard you and says through the door. "It''s me. Grisha, the plumber. You owe me some money, remember?"'
 
 		act 'Answer the door':
 			*clr & cla
 			money -= santehnikDolg
 			santehnikDolg = 0
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You open the door and Gregory smiles. "I thought you were hiding from me now. Well? Do you have my money?" You nod and pay him the 1,500 rubles.'
+			'You open the door and Gregory smiles. "I thought you were hiding from me. So? Do you have my money?" You nod and pay him the 1,500 rubles.'
 
 			act 'Close the door':gt $curloc
 		end
@@ -125,7 +125,7 @@ if IvanPodstavaQW = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 		karta = 0
 		stolmoney = 0
 		minut += 120
-		'For you police patrol arrived and took you to court. You have managed to pay off its debt and you were released to reconcile the parties.'
+		'A police patrol arrives and takes you to court. You manage to pay off your debts and you are released after reconciling the parties.'
 
 		act 'Get out of the courthouse':gt 'down'
 	else
@@ -137,7 +137,7 @@ if IvanPodstavaQW = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 		year += 5
 		age = year - ((pcs_dob - (pcs_dob mod 10000)) / 10000)
 		money = 2000
-		'For you police patrol arrived and took you to court. At trial, you were given five years of general regime, is obliged to pay debt <<DolgRS>>.'
+		'A police patrol arrives and takes you to court. After standing a trial, you were given five years of general regime and required to pay your debt of <<DolgRS>>.'
 
 		act 'Sit on the area':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -177,7 +177,7 @@ if IvanPodstavaQW = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 			lektor = 0
 			gs 'stat'
 
-			'Time dragged on too long. Your life and work was tedious and monotonous. You sewed quilted five years, had dinner in the dining room and went to sleep in the barracks surrounded by other women inmates. With your salary of 2, 000 <b>₽</b> per month in 1000 listed on the debt repayment. But time does not stand still and still came an end to your suffering. You let go and gave 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You took the train and came back to the city.'
+			'Time draggs on slowly. Your life and work are tedious and monotonous. You''ve been sewing for five years, having meals in the dining room and going to sleep in the barracks surrounded by other women inmates. With your salary of 2,000 <b>₽</b> per month 1000 of which going on debt repayment. But for as slow as it seems, time does not stand still and finally your torment comes to an end. You are released and given 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You take the train and came back to the city.'
 
 			act 'Get off the train': gt 'nordtrain', 'outside'
 		end
@@ -191,26 +191,26 @@ if IvanPodstavaDay ! daystart and IvanPodstavaQW = 1 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 2
 	act 'Come to the door':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You came to the door and looked through the peephole. On the site you saw a few men. In the darkness you have seen them on their caps. One of the men said to you through the door. <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>> open, police.'
+		'You came to the door and look through the peephole. You saw a few men. Even in the dark you recognize them from their caps. One of the men says through the door. <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>> open, police.'
 
 		act 'Answer the door':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 60
 			IvanPodstavaQW = 2
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You opened the door to police wondering what they need from you. In the room were several men in uniform and with them several men in civilian clothes. Lean and skinny guy with stubble week and a pistol in a holster on a belt tied armpit said. "Understood, take your seats. Who will search in the apartment of the citizen who is accused of stealing." The investigator turned to you. "That''s a warrant for your arrest, this, this search warrant. Could you read it." Policemen full searched your apartment. Soon, one of them came out and said. Here are found the keys, according to the description it is just the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen. Witnesses signed the protocol that gave them the investigator. He frowned at you and nodded policeman, who started your hands behind your back and your wrists snap handcuffs.'
+			'You open the door to police wondering what they want from you. There are several men in uniform and others in civilian clothes. A lean and skinny guy with with a weeks worth of stubble and a pistol in a holster on a belt-tied armpit says: "Witness please take a seat, while we search the apartment of the citizen accused of stealing." The investigator turns to you. "That''s a warrant for your arrest, while this is a search warrant. You can read it." The policemen full search your apartment. Soon, one of them came out and says: "Here, are found the keys, according to the description they look like the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen." The witnesses signs the protocol got from the investigator. He then frowns at you and nodds to the policeman, who puts your hands behind your back and snaps the handcuffs around your wrists.'
 
 			act 'Go with the police':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 60
 				gs 'stat'
-				'Brought you out of the house in handcuffs and put in a police UAZ. After, steel doors slam and UAZ car started shaking and growling at each bump. Finally you have arrived somewhere and you taking from UAZ performed in the office to have a friend you investigator. He took off the handcuffs and offered you a seat. You took a hard and uncomfortable chair, and an investigator in the meantime turned on the TV and put a video cassette. On the screen was a picture of a security camera in bystroeshke. There was visible corridor. Soon appeared in the corridor you. You came to the door and opened it entered the office. After a while, the door opened and you are out of the office with a thick envelope. Investigator turned a VCR tape and pulled, after which he put another tape. On the next cabinet drawer was Anatoly Chubais. The front door opened and it included you, holding keys in hand. You went to the safe and opened it with the key. Got envelope. <<$burgerIvanText>>. Investigator turned the TV off and pulled out 				a plastic bag with table keys. He threw them on the table, and finally spoke. "Tests showed it really the keys to the office and the safe owner bystroezhki. During the search they were found in your apartment. Surveillance cameras on the record clearly shows how you entered the office and stole 650 thousand." He took out the protocol and taking pen in hand began to write. Filled a slate floor, he raised his dark eyes on you and said. "Confession will help you in court. All the same, it is the first time and provided that you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence, if you admit your guilt."'
+				'You''re taken out of the house in handcuffs and pushed into a police UAZ. After the metal doors slams, the UAZ car leaves, shaking and growling at each bump. Finally you arrive somewhere and you are taken from the UAZ into a building and in an office where the investigator you already know, is waiting for you. He tooks the handcuffs off you and offers you a seat. You sit in a hard and uncomfortable chair, meanwhile the investigator turns the TV on and inserts a videocassette. On the screen there''s a picture of a security camera in Bystroeshke. At the beginning it only shows corridor. Soon you appear in the corridor. You go to the office door, opened it and enter. After a while, the door opens again and you come out of the office holding a thick envelope. The investigator takes the VCR tape out and then he inserts another one. It shows Chubais office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and take an envelope with <<$burgerIvanText>> written on it. The investigator turns the TV off, takes a plastic bag from the table with the keys and finally speaks. "Tests prove that the keys found in your apartment are those to the office and the safe of Bystroezhki. The tapes from the surveillance cameras clearly shows you entering the office and taking 650.000 rubles." He takes out a pen and paper and begins to write. While writing he looks up to you with gloomy eyes and says. "A confession will help you in the court. Since this is a first time offense and provided you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence, if you admit your guilt."'
 
 				act 'Sign confession':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 60
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You sign a confession and an investigator barked "duty." Policeman entered the room. The investigator nodded showing him you get her.'
+					'You sign a confession and the investigator barks: "Duty officer." A policeman enters the room. The investigator nods in your direction and tells him "Take her."'
 
 					act 'Go':gt 'kameraKPZ'
 				end
@@ -219,7 +219,7 @@ if IvanPodstavaDay ! daystart and IvanPodstavaQW = 1 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 2
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 60
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You were telling the investigator how everything was. As a manager Ivan Framed you. But the investigator listened to you in half an ear. Finally, he slammed his fist on the table and yelled at you, "I was not born yesterday, that would feed me such nonsense:If you will not cooperate, I''ll rot!" Policeman entered the room. The investigator nodded showing him you get her.'
+					'You tell the investigator what actually happened. How Ivan framed you. But the investigator hardly listen to you for a while, them he slams his fist on the table and yells at you, "I was not born yesterday, i don''t believe such nonsense. If you will not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" A policeman enters the room. The investigator nods in your direction and tells "Take her."'
 
 					act 'Go':gt 'kameraKPZ'
 				end
@@ -244,7 +244,7 @@ if sick > 0 and doktorday ! daystart:
 	!!	if sick < 1:sick = 1
 	!!	if sickstage = 1:sicktimer += 5
 
-	!!	'Has come to you from the clinic and the doctor examined you. After examination, the doctor made a shot and you will become easier.'
+	!!	'A doctor arrives from the clinic and examins you. After examination, the doctor gives a shot and you feel better.'
 
 	!!	act 'Move away':gt 'korr'
 	!!end
@@ -256,23 +256,23 @@ $ninel0 = {
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel00.jpg"></center>'
-	'You open the door. Standing on the threshold is a pretty young girl with a doctors bag in her hand.'
+	'You open the door. Standing on the threshold there''s a pretty young girl with a doctors bag in her hand.'
 	'You greet her.'
 	'"Hello. My name is Ninel P. - I do the home visits for the clinic. Where is the patient?"'
 	'"That would be me ... kha-kha-kha."'
-	'"Understood. First we need to get you back into bed."'
+	'"I see. First we need to get you back into bed."'
 
-	act 'Pursue a doctorate in the bedroom and lay down':
+	act 'Follow the doctor in the bedroom and lay down':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		ninelmet = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom0.jpg"></center>'
-		'The doctor sat on the edge of your bed and sprsil:'
-		'(Doctor) - On that complain of <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?'
-		'(You) - Of course ... Ahem, ahem, ahem ... Oh, Doctor, perhaps I have the flu - cough just kills and very sore throat. And the temperature is high.'
-		'(Doctor) - Runny nose is? Headaches? Aching bones?'
-		'(You) - Yes. Aachoo and!'
-		'(Doctor) - Now I will examine you. Undress.'
+		'The doctor sat on the edge of your bed and checks your forehead:'
+		'(Doctor) - What are your symptoms <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?'
+		'(You) - Of course... - You start to answer but end up coughing. - Sorry, I have high fever, sore throat and a cough that''s killing me'
+		'(Doctor) - Running nose? Headaches? Aching bones?'
+		'(You) - Yes, alla of them'
+		'(Doctor) - Well, take your clothes off, so I can examine you.'
 
 		act 'Undress':
 			cla
@@ -282,33 +282,33 @@ $ninel0 = {
 			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You undressed and the doctor listened to your lungs for a long time. Her hands are cool and gentle touch and caress like a stethoscope ...'
-			'(Doctor) - Yes, wheezing ... Now open your mouth. That''s because - "ah-ah-ah" ...'
+			'You undressed and the doctor listens to your lungs for a long time. Her hands are cool and gentle as she touches you, while the stethoscope is cold...'
+			'(Doctor) - Mmmm, now lets take a look at your mouth, open wide and say Aaah...'
 
 			act 'A-a-a':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel03.jpg"></center>'
-				'You opened your mouth and the doctor examined your sore throat'
-				'(Doctor) - Hmmm ... throat strongly reddened and inflamed ... Now we need to measure the temperature.'
+				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in examining your sore throat'
+				'(Doctor) - I see... your throat is very red and inflamed... Now we need to take your temperature.'
 
-				act 'Stick a thermometer in her mouth':
+				act 'Put a thermometer in your mouth':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel04.jpg"></center>'
-					'(Dr.) No, not so. Temperature should be measured rectally.'
-					'(You) - Uh-uh ...'
-					'(Doctor) - Do not be afraid, <<$pcs_nickname>>, is not painful.'
-					'(You) - Well if you''re sure ...'
-					'(Doctor) - I''m sure. Come on - lie down on his stomach and spread your hands buttocks.'
+					'(Dr.) No, not so. The temperature needs to be measured rectally.'
+					'(You) - What...?'
+					'(Doctor) - It''s more preceisa and don''t be afraid, <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s not painful.'
+					'(You) - Well if i have to...'
+					'(Doctor) - It''s necessary. Come on, lie down on your stomach and spread your buttocks with the hands, please.'
 
-					act 'Substitute ass':
+					act 'Change position':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						clr
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom2.jpg"></center>'
-						'You obediently roll over and substitute ass. Dr. lubricates your anus lubricated and deftly introduces a thermometer. You flinch, but not from pain and pleasure. Doctor leaves just stick a thermometer in your ass and slowly moves it back and forth and it''s very nice. You feel the growing excitement.'
+						'You obediently roll over offering your ass. The doctor lubricates your anus with some vaselin and deftly introduces a thermometer. You flinch, not from pain but pleasure. The doctor doesn''t leaves just stick the thermometer in your ass but slowly moves it back and forth... It''s very nice and you feel a growing excitement.'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -318,22 +318,22 @@ $ninel0 = {
 								cla
 								*clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
-								'Doctor takes the thermometer out of your buttocks and checks'
-								'(Dr.) 39.2 ... Very bad. Please turn on your back - you need to palpate the lymph nodes.'
+								'Doctor takes the thermometer out of your ass and checks it'
+								'(Dr.) 39.2 ... Very bad. Please turn on your back, I need to palpate the lymph nodes.'
 
-								act 'Roll over on his back':
+								act 'Roll over on your back':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom5.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor began to stroke and knead your stomach and thighs. You are not sure that this is a medical procedure - too long and tenderly she delalet, but you are very nice and you did not object.'
-									'Excitement, meanwhile, is growing all, you feel like your pussy moistened and begins to whine sweet ...'
+									'The doctor began to stroke and knead your stomach and thighs. You are not actually sure this is a medical procedure, she does it for too long and tenderly, but it''s too pleasant and you don''t object.'
+									'Meanwhile, your excitement is growing, you feel your pussy moistening and you start to whine sweetly...'
 
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 									gs 'stat'
 
-									act 'A blush of embarrassment':
+									act 'Blush of embarrassment':
 										cla
 										*clr
 										clr
@@ -341,22 +341,22 @@ $ninel0 = {
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom6.jpg"></center>'
 										'You blush with embarrassment, but then fall below the hands of the doctor and she begins to caress your pussy'
-										'(You) - Doctor, what are you doing! - At the same time embarrassed, outraged and frightened screams you.'
+										'(You) - Doctor, what are you doing! - You scream at the same time embarrassed, outraged and frightened.'
 										'(Doctor) - Flying you, silly. I feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use his power quietly.'
 										'(You) - So you''re a magician, too?'
-										'(Doctor) - Yes, only my special magic - Tantric. Heard of it?'
-										'(You) - No, I do not remember ...'
-										'(Doctor) - It''s magic, based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only when having sex.'
+										'(Doctor) - Yes, only a special kind magic, Tantric. Have you heard of it?'
+										'(You) - No, I don''t think so...'
+										'(Doctor) - It''s a magic, based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only when having sex.'
 										'(You) - So ..?'
-										'(Doctor) - That is, if we have sex with you - I heal you. Do you agree?'
-										'(You) - And what in return?'
-										'(Doctor) - Nothing - I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I see you, have orgasms only if conjure.'
+										'(Doctor) - That is, if I have sex with you, I will heal you. So? Do you agree?'
+										'(You) - And what should i do in return?'
+										'(Doctor) - Nothing - I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I see you have orgasms only if conjure.'
 										'(You) - Then of course - I agree.'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 										gs 'stat'
 
-										act 'Surrender to the gentle hands Ninel':gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
+										act 'Surrender to the gentle hands of Ninel':gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
 									end
 								end
 							end
@@ -366,16 +366,16 @@ $ninel0 = {
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
-							'(You) - Doctor, what are you doing?'
-							'Doctor takes the thermometer out of your buttocks and calmly replied:'
-							'(Doctor) - measures your temperature. 39.2 - very bad.'
+							'(You) - Doctor, what the hell are you doing?'
+							'The doctor takes the thermometer out of your ass and calmly replies:'
+							'(Doctor) - I measure your temperature. 39.2 - very bad.'
 
-							act 'Doctor, what with me?':
+							act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
 								cla
-								'(You scared) - Doctor, what with me?'
-								'(Dr.) Do you really flu. Now I''ll give you an injection of antibiotic and antipyretic, and you will feel better.'
+								'(You, scared) - Doctor, what''s wrong with me?'
+								'(Dr.) Do you really have a bad flu. But I''ll make you an injection of antibiotic and antigen, and you will soon feel better.'
 
-								act 'Lie on your stomach and bare ass':
+								act 'Lie on your stomach and bare your ass':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									minut += 10
@@ -384,52 +384,52 @@ $ninel0 = {
 									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom4.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor did give you a shot in the ass - you cried'
-									'(Doctor) - Just about everything, everything is. You prescribe bed rest, hot drinks, antibiotics, nose drops and a balanced diet. When the temperature drops - the clinic appointment.'
-									'(You) - Thank you, Doctor - is necessary.'
-									'Doctor said goodbye and left.'
+									'The doctor gives you a shot in one of your ass cheeks - you cry'
+									'(Doctor) - That''s about everything. You have to rest in bed, drink hot drinks, take antibiotics and nose drops, stay on a balanced diet. When the temperature drops, come to the clinic to see me.'
+									'(You) - Thank you, Doctor, i will follow your instructions.'
+									'Doctor says goodbye and leaves.'
 
 									act 'Back to bed':gt 'bedr'
 								end
 							end
 						end
 
-						act 'Doctor, what with me?':
+						act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
 							cla
-							'(You scared) - Doctor, what with me?'
-							'(Doctor) - I''m afraid that you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you to inpatient treatment'
-							'(You) - What''s that - in the hospital, or what?'
-							'(Doctor) - Yes'
+							'(You, scared) - Doctor, what''s wrong with me?'
+							'(Doctor) - I''m afraid you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you an immediate treatment'
+							'(You) - What''s ?! You mean in the hospital, or what?'
+							'(Doctor) - Yes, at the clinic.'
 
 							act 'Refuse':
 								cla
 								*clr
-								'(You sobbing) - Oh, Doctor, I do not want to the hospital ...'
-								'(Doctor, thoughtfully) - Well ... I guess it is still possible. Then I''ll give you a couple of shots - to start ...'
+								'(You, sobbing) - Oh, Doctor, I can''t go to the hospital ...'
+								'(Doctor, thoughtfully) - Well... I guess we could do in a different way then... I''ll give you a couple of shots, to start with...'
 								'(You) - Oh, thank you, doctor!'
 
-								act 'Lie on your stomach and bare ass':
+								act 'Lie on your stomach and bare your ass':
 									cla
 									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom9.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor made a few jabs you in the ass, and you suddenly enveloped incredible sexual arousal. Between her thighs you like the fire started, sweet pussy ached and flowed, grew heavy chest, nipples harden and solidify ...'
-									'(You) - Doctor, what''s happening? - Screams frightened and embarrassed you, but your voice treacherously breaks on voluptuous moan'
-									'(Doctor) - Yeah! I knew it - I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use his power quietly.'
-									'(You) - So you''re a magician too!.'
-									'(Doctor) - Yes, only my special magic - Tantric. Heard of it?'
-									'(You) - No, I do not remember ...'
-									'(Doctor) - It''s magic, based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only when having sex.'
+									'The doctor pats your ass a few times and you suddenly develop an incredible sexual arousal. It is as if a fire started between your thighs, your pussy burns and drips, your breath gets heavy, your nipples harden and get stiff...'
+									'(You) - Doctor, what''s happening? - You ask almost screaming, embarrassed and kind of frightened, but your voice breaks, betraying your arousal, and you moan voluptuously'
+									'(Doctor) - Yeah! I knew it - I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my power quietly.'
+									'(You) - So you''re a magician too!'
+									'(Doctor) - Yes, only a special kind magic, Tantric. Have you heard of it?'
+									'(You) - No, I don''t think so...'
+									'(Doctor) - It''s magic, based on sensuality and sex, roughly speaking, I can cast spells only while having sex.'
 									'(You) - So ..?'
-									'(Doctor) - That is, if we have sex with you - I heal you. Do you agree?'
-									'(You) - And what in return?'
+									'(Doctor) - That''s it, if we have sex with you, I will heal you. Do you agree?'
+									'(You) - And what should i do in return?'
 									'(Doctor) - Nothing - I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I see you, have orgasms only if conjure.'
 									'(You) - Then of course - I agree.'
 
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 									gs 'stat'
 
-									act 'Surrender to the gentle hands Ninel':gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
+									act 'Surrender to the gentle touch of Ninel':gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
 								end
 							end
 						end
@@ -443,20 +443,20 @@ $ninel0 = {
 $drPP = {
 	cla
 	*clr
-	'You open the door. Standing in the doorway of an elderly bald man with a suitcase in hand meitsinskim.'
-	'(You) - Kha-kha ... Hello, Doctor'
-	'(Doctor) - Hello, sick - I''m Peter, your local therapist. Go back to bed - do not stand in the draft.'
+	'You answer the door. On the threshold there is an older balding man with a medical bag in his hand.'
+	'"Hello, doctor."'
+	'"Hello, dear. I am Peter, the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this draft.'
 
-	act 'Hold a doctorate in the bedroom.':
+	act 'Take the doctor to the bedroom.':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You have returned to the bedroom with a doctor. He sat on the edge of the bed and felt your forehead'
-		'(Doctor) - Well, the patient, to complain that?'
-		'(You) - Ahem, ahem, ahem ... Oh, Doctor, perhaps, I have a sore throat - very sore throat and high temperature.'
-		'(Doctor) - And cough, as I see it. And judging by your voice, you have a nose, sick, laid.'
-		'(You) - Yes. Aachoo!'
-		'(Doctor) - Well, the sick, you hear Dwight. Undress.'
+		'You get back to the bedroom with the doctor. He sits on the edge of the bed and feels your forehead'
+		'"So <<$pcs_nickname>>. What are your symptoms?'
+		'(You) - Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have sore throat - very sore actually - and high temperature.'
+		'(Doctor) - And cough, as I see it. And judging by your voice, also a running nose.'
+		'(You) - Yes... Aachoo!'
+		'(Doctor) - Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, please remove your clothes so i can examine you.'
 
 		act 'Undress':
 			cla
@@ -465,27 +465,27 @@ $drPP = {
 			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You undressed and Dr. vysnushival long your lungs '
-			'(Doctor) - So, sir. Now let''s look at the neck. Open your mouth wide and say "Ah-ah"'
+			'You undressed and the doctor listens to your lungs for a while.'
+			'"Now lets take a look at your throat, open your mouth wide and say Ah."'
 
 			act 'A-a-a':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp3.jpg"></center>'
-				'You opened your mouth and your doctor looked red sore throat'
-				'(Doctor) - Ay-ay-ay ... How is it you do that? Should be tempered, ill - tempered. Well, let''s measure your temperature.'
+				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in.'
+				'(Doctor) - Mmmm... i see. Well, let''s take your temperature.'
 
-				act 'Put the thermometer armpit':
+				act 'Put the thermometer under your armpit':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp4.jpg"></center>'
-					'The doctor looked at the thermometer and shook his head'
+					'The doctor waits a few minutes, then looks at the thermometer and shakes his head'
 
-					act 'Doctor, what with me?':
+					act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
 						cla
-						'(Dr.) Do you have the flu, sick. Do not worry - I''ll give you a shot and you''ll feel better soon. Soak a couple of days in bed, drinketh drugs, and it becomes easier - to see me'
+						'"You have the flu." He says "Nothing too serious, I''ll give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now roll over so I can give you the injection."'
 
-						act 'Substitute ass':
+						act 'Roll over and lay on your stomach':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							minut += 10
@@ -493,10 +493,10 @@ $drPP = {
 							lekarstvo += 3
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp5.jpg"></center>'
-							'The doctor did give you a shot in the ass - you cried'
-							'(Doctor) - Well, well, sick, do not worry. And remember - bed rest, regular meals and medication. And do not forget to come to the reception.'
-							'(You) - Thank you, Doctor - is necessary.'
-							'Doctor said goodbye and left, and you venules in bed.'
+							'The doctor gives you a shot in the ass'
+							'(Doctor) - Remember stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest. When you feel better come by the clinic.'
+							'(You) - Thank you, Doctor, I will.'
+							'You escort the doctor to the entrace, he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door you head back to bed.'
 
 							act 'Back to bed':gt 'bedr'
 						end
@@ -513,44 +513,42 @@ $polidin = {
 	minut += 15
 	callrand = rand(1, 3)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'You dial the number several times clinics - there all the time busy.'
+	'You dial the number of the clinic several times it''s always busy.'
 
 	act 'Call again and again':
 		cla
-		'Finally, you''ve reached. Tired voice tube nurse replied:'
-		'(Nurse) - Hello - reception ...'
+		'Finally, a tired nurse''s voice answers. "Hello clinic."'
 
 		act 'Hello ...':
 			cla
-			'(You) - Hello. Cough-cough ... Can I call a doctor to the house?'
-			'(Nurse) - Your name and address?'
+			'"Hello. Can I get a house call?" You manage to say between coughing fits.'
+			'The nurse asks. "Your name and address?"'
 
-			act 'Introduce':
+			act 'Give address':
 				cla
-				'(You) - Mi ... Kha-kha! Sorry ... <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Park Street apartment house 4 69 ... Aa-and-pchhi!'
-				'(Nurse) - It''s okay. Wait a minute.'
+				'After coughing "Sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4 apartment 69." you manage before sneezing again.'
+				'The nurse responds. "One moment please." Then she puts you on hold.'
 
 				act 'Wait':
 					cla
 					minut += 5
 					clr
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You wait five minutes, occasionally coughing into the phone and finally hear:'
-					'(Nurse) - So - <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. here is your card ... What are you worried?'
-					'(You) - Kha-kha-kha ... I''m sorry ... I have a fever and sore throat very. And cough and runny nose.'
-					'(Nurse) - high temperature?'
-					'(You) - Yes, very - 39.2 ... Aa-pchhi!'
-					'(Nurse) - Right. Wait - the doctor will come to you.'
-					'(You) - A soon?'
-					'(Nurse) - As soon as he can. Your challenge - not unique.'
-					'(You) - Save ... Kha-kha! Thank you ... ...'
+					'You wait for five minutes, occasionally coughing and sneezing, until she finally returns. "So <<$pcs_lastname>> <<$pcs_nickname>>. What are your symptoms?'
+					'You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry, I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
+					'"Is your temperature high?"'
+					'"Yes, quite so, 39.2°C" You tell her followed by a sneeze.'
+					'"Very well a doctor will come see you at home."'
+					'"How soon?"'
+					'"As soon as one is free." She answers "Yours isn''t an isolated case"'
+					'"Thank you." You say'
 
 					if ninelsex = 1:
-						act 'Is it possible to cause Ninel Pavlovna?':
+						act 'Is Ninel Pavlovna available?':
 							cla
-							'(You) - Is it possible to cause Ninel Pavlovna? She regularly osmatrivat me.'
-							'(Nurse) - I''ll see if she is free.'
-							'(You) - Once again, thank you.'
+							'"Is Doctor Ninel Pavlovna available? She is my regular doctor."'
+							'"Let me check" The nurse puts you on hold for a couple of minutes and then comes back on. "Yes she is free and will make the house call."'
+							'"Once again, thank you very much."'
 
 							act 'Continue':gt 'housecall', 'ninel3'
 						end
@@ -563,7 +561,7 @@ $polidin = {
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 						timerand = rand(1, 6)
 						minut += timerand * 30
-						'You are lying in bed, shivering in the chill and wrapped in a blanket. Time passes excruciatingly slow - you can not tell how much time passed before the doorbell rang.'
+						'You lie in bed, shivering wrapped in a blanket. Time drags by painfully slow, you can''t say, how much time passes before the doorbell rings.'
 
 						! WD: Uninitialised ~ 'ninel' use 'ninelmet'
 						act 'Answer the door':