[text edit] clean up some of the text for sisterQW

locations/sisterQW.qsrc

@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_39.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You entered the room, the sweet couple tumbling in the bed.'
+		'As you enter the room, you see Anya and Roma tumbling in the bed.'
 		'Anya notices you, Roma frees her from his embrace and she walks slowly to you and starts kissing and undressing you.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 			*nl
 			'You easily succumb to temptation and kiss Anya back.'
 			'Her hands wander across your body, slowly warming and undressing you.'
-			'You were completely at the mercy of your sisters caresses, and did not notice that you are naked in front of Roma, oblivious to his wandering eyes.'
+			'You are completely at the mercy of your sisters caresses, and did not notice that you are now naked in front of Roma, oblivious to his wandering eyes.'
 			'Anya tells him to sit, you see that he is naked too, and she kneels with you in front of him, your faces by his crotch.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -72,7 +72,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 				*nl
 				'You slowly began to lick up and down the trunk. The feeling so novel you are trembling with excitement.'
 				'If Anya did not keep her hand firmly on his member, Roma would certainly have driven it into your mouth balls deep, you can feel the restrained power.'
-				'Later, having shared with your sister. Taking turns to suck it slowly and carefully. You manage to swallow half of Roma''s <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick, and lick your tongue over the entire length. Roma lies back.'
+				'You both take turns sucking him slowly and carefully. You manage to swallow half of Roma''s <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick, and lick your tongue over the entire length. Roma sighs and lies down on his back.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Sex': gt 'sisterQW', 'trio_sex'
@@ -83,9 +83,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_45.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You entered the room, the sweet couple tumbling in the bed.'
+		'As you enter the room, you see Anya and Roma tumbling in the bed.'
 		'This time there is no embarrassment, your eyes sparkle. Anna slowly walks up to you and kisses you passionately, you gently return her kisses.'
-		'Anya starts to knead your breasts through your clothes, then she slides your bra straps off your shoulders and removes your bra, later your panties are pulled down, and you have nothing on.'
+		'Anya starts to knead your breasts through your clothes, then she slides your bra straps off your shoulders and removes your bra, later your panties are pulled down, and you are left with nothing on.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Suck':
@@ -116,7 +116,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 				'Anya lies down, and you get on top of her in a 69. You begin to lick each other. After admiring you for a couple of minutes Roma moves towards you.'
 				'Your ass is exposed invitingly towards him, and he slowly enters your pussy with his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
 				'He drives his member in the entire length, sometimes Anya''s tongue moves to it, serving your clitoris and licking his balls.'
-				'The double sensations are too much and you have a small yet fulfilling orgasm, a few minutes later Roma feels, that he is near.'
+				'The double sensations are too much and you have a small yet fulfilling orgasm, a few minutes later Roma feels that he is near.'
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
@@ -173,8 +173,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_49.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You entered the room, the sweet couple tumbling in the bed.'
-		'Anya sees you and just waves you over, while continuing to caress Roma. Quickly undressing, and excited you are already impatient to join them.'
+		'As you enter the room, you see Anya and Roma tumbling in the bed.'
+		'Anya sees you and just waves you over, while continuing to caress Roma. You quickly undress, as you have been excited all day to join them.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Suck':
@@ -231,7 +231,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_53.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You entered the room, the sweet couple tumbling in the bed.'
+		'As you enter the room, you see Anya and Roma tumbling in the bed.'
 		'Throwing Anna on the bed, Roma grabs you and starts violently kissing your sexy body. Quickly and without any resistance on your part, he strips you naked.'
 		'Roma says that loves being deep throated, you do not need to be persuaded.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
@@ -260,7 +260,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sisboyqw_55.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
 				'This time Roma takes control, he puts you on all fours, and tells Anna to lay in front of you, legs wide apart. Then, kneeling behind you, he unceremoniously drives his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your pussy and begins to move violently pounding you feverishly.'
-				'Anya, meanwhile, presses your pretty face to her Pussy, and you barely having time to catch your breath from Roma''s violent actions, again immersed in your sweet sisters pussy.'
+				'Anya, meanwhile, presses your pretty face to her pussy, and you barely having time to catch your breath from Roma''s violent actions, again immersed in your sweet sisters pussy.'
 				'You try your best to bring her pleasure, as she is lying and enjoy your tongue while earnestly looking into Roma''s eyes, who was on the verge.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'incest', 'group'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'rough'
@@ -294,8 +294,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_57.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You entered the room, the sweet couple tumbling in the bed.'
-		'You walk over, tearing off your clothes and jump on the couple on the bed'
+		'As you enter the room, you see Anya and Roma tumbling in the bed.'
+		'You walk over, tearing off your clothes and jump on the couple on the bed.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Suck':
@@ -306,7 +306,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sisboytrioQW_bedroom' and $ARGS[1] = 'start':
 			*nl
 			'You begin to suck the resilient, thick rod at once. His hard cock in your mouth, you try very hard to suck it as expertly as your sister.'
 			'Now more comfortable with your new plaything, you overcome your reflex and take it deep, until your lips are tickled by his pubes. You do not want it to finish.'
-			'In turns you and Anya lick and bite the head, then slide your tongues all over the shaft to the testicles and back, kissing when you meet at his tip.'
+			'In turns you and Anya lick and suck the head, then slide your tongues all over the shaft to the testicles and back, kissing when you meet at his tip.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'deepthroat'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Sex':
@@ -799,9 +799,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_find':
 	minut += 5
 	gs'stat'
 	'You are looking for your sister, but I can''t find her. "Where the hell, did she go?" You looked everywhere, you need to find her.'
-	act 'In the toilet': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_toilet'
-	act 'In the kitchen': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kit'
-	act 'In the room': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kom'
+	act 'Look in the bathroom': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_toilet'
+	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kit'
+	act 'Look in the bedroom': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kom'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kit':
@@ -812,7 +812,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kit':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_24.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'You burst into the kitchen, and look around for your sister. You find two drunk chicks having fun in the corner of the room, but neither of them know where your sister is. Suddenly, you hear heavy breathing behind you.'
-	act 'To turn':
+	act 'Turn around':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_25.jpg"></center>'
@@ -865,8 +865,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kit':
 					$npc_lastpart['A33'] = '$boy1'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_28.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You frown seeing your sister used like this, but maybe it would be better for her if you let them use you too. So she wouldn''t be the solo object of their lust. "Ok, who wants to fuck me first?" You say as you walk over and take your clothes off.'
-					'The one that had been talking to you and fucking your sisters mouth pulls away from her and shoves you down on your hands and knees. With out waiting he shoves his cock in your ass and begins to furiously fuck you.'
+					'You frown seeing your sister used like this, but maybe it would be better for her if you let them use you too, so she wouldn''t be the solo object of their lust. "Ok, who wants to fuck me first?" You say as you walk over and take your clothes off.'
+					'The one that had been talking to you and fucking your sisters mouth pulls away from her and shoves you down on your hands and knees. Without waiting he shoves his cock in your ass and begins to furiously fuck you.'
 					'You hands tighten as you grimace in pain, trying to think about anything but the pain of having your ass tore up.'
 					'It goes on for some time, eventually the boys switch places, taking turns fucking you and Anya in the ass. Finally mercifully they cum inside of both of you. After they finished they laughed and left the room.'
 					'You gather up your clothes and get dressed and then help Anya get dressed as you help her home.'
@@ -893,9 +893,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_toilet':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_22.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Going to the toilet you find some guy pushing some poor girls head into the toilet. It wasn''t Anya and you didn''t want to get involved so you left.'
-	act 'In the kitchen': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kit'
-	act 'In the room': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kom'
+	'In the bathroom you find some guy pushing some poor girls head into the toilet. It wasn''t Anya and you didn''t want to get involved so you left.'
+	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kit'
+	act 'Look in the bedroom': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kom'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kom':
@@ -905,9 +905,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anna_kom':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_23.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'In the room you saw two guys jacking off on the face of some poor unconscious girl. As one of them says to the other. "Let''s get the fuck out of here before she wakes up, I don''t want to deal with her ex-boyfriend, he''s one of the boxers.'
-	act 'In the kitchen': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kit'
-	act 'In the toilet': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_toilet'
+	'In the bedroom you see two guys jerking off on the face of some poor unconscious girl. As one of them says to the other. "Let''s get the fuck out of here before she wakes up, I don''t want to deal with her ex-boyfriend, he''s one of the boxers.'
+	act 'Look in the bathroom': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_toilet'
+	act 'Look in the kitchen': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_kit'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'reks':
@@ -918,7 +918,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'reks':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_19.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'"Hey girly, damn you''ve been having fun. Oh yeah, you''re Anya''s sister, I know, she''s... that''s odd, I haven''t seen her. Although I have been drinking bubbly all day, here, drink up."'
-	'With this he starts pouring the sweet Champagne down your throat, he''s so drunk he pours it much to fast and as much as you try to keep up, alot of it spills on the floor.
+	'With this he starts pouring the sweet champagne down your throat, he''s so drunk he pours it much too fast and as much as you try to keep up, alot of it spills on the floor.
 	 Then, without a word, Rex just staggers off.'
 	act 'Look For Anya': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_find'
 	act 'Follow Rex to the toilet for birthday sex':
@@ -928,11 +928,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'reks':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_20.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
 		'You went to the bathroom only to find Rex already there just finishing taking a piss with his dick still out in his hand. "Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, you again? I''m here already..."'
-		'Stopping him in mid-sentence, pushed him down to sit on the toilet, pulling his hand away from his cock. You start taking your clothes off, you watch his cock stiffen and grow while he stares at your naked nubile body. You climb on and straddle him. Lowering yourself on his cock, you feel it slide into your wet pussy and you being to ride him as you kiss him. While you whisper. "Happy birthday."'
+		'Stopping him in mid-sentence, you push him down to sit on the toilet, and pull his hand away from his cock. You start taking your clothes off, you watch his cock stiffen and grow while he stares at your naked nubile body. You climb on and straddle him. Lowering yourself on his cock, you feel it slide into your wet pussy and you being to ride him as you kiss him. While you whisper. "Happy birthday."'
 		'"Fucking hell." he mumbled while you rode him.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
-		act 'Doggy style':
+		act 'Doggystyle':
 			*clr & cla
 			reksSex = 1
 			gs 'boyStat', 'A57'
@@ -940,9 +940,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'reks':
 			gs 'cum_manage'
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_21.mp4"></video></center>'
 			*nl
-			'Rex growls as he grabs you and lifts you off him. He gets up and bends you over, he plunges his dick right back into your pussy and begins to furiously fuck you balls deep.'
-			'"Not so fast, not so deep." You begged him, but gradually, the pain melted from his frantic balls deep fucking and gave way to waves of deep pleasure.'
-			'With a final grunt he shoots his sperm deep inside your pussy. "Wow <<$pcs_nickname>>, You are hotter than your sister." With these words he left.'
+			'Rex growls as he grabs you and lifts you off him. He gets up, bends you over, and plunges his dick right back into your pussy and begins to furiously fuck you balls deep.'
+			'"Not so fast, not so deep." You beg him, but gradually, the pain melted from his frantic balls deep fucking and gave way to waves of deep pleasure.'
+			'With a final grunt he shoots his sperm deep inside your pussy. "Wow <<$pcs_nickname>>, You are hotter than your sister." With these words he leaves you alone in the bathroom.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'rough'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Look For Anya': gt 'sisterQW', 'anna_find'
@@ -955,17 +955,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'two_boy':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_14.mp4"></video></center>'
 	*nl
-	'They rubbed your body, touched Boobs, and squeezed your ass. Under the influence of alcohol, you really liked it, and just enjoyed the moment'
-	'Seeing, that you do not resist they drag you into the next room.'
+	'They rubbed your body, touched boobs, and squeezed your ass. Under the influence of alcohol, you really like it, and just enjoy the moment'
+	'Seeing, that you do not resist they pull you into the next room.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Go':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_15.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'Entering the room they threw you on the bed and pulled out there cocks for you to service.'
-		'In a drunken fog you tried to grab one, then the other, but you was to drunk as the room was spinning.'
-		'One of the guys started licking your pussy, you felt yourself moaning in passion.'
+		'As you enter the room, they pushed you down on the bed and pull out their cocks for you to service.'
+		'In a drunken fog you try to grab one, then the other, but you are so drunk the room is spinning.'
+		'One of the guys started licking your pussy, and you can hear yourself moaning in passion.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Doggystyle':
@@ -976,9 +976,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'two_boy':
 			$boy1[2] = $npclastgenerated
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_16.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'The lift you up into doggy style, their hands help hold you steady as of them slips his dick in your pussy and the other shoves his in your mouth.'
-			'The guys start laughing, obviously having fun fucking you as they talked and joked to each other. "She''s still a little young, I think she might be Anya''s sister."'
-			'"Fuck I think you''re right, she''s a sweet little thing, but I don''t fuck Schoolgirls." Looking at his friend getting a blowjob from you. "Hey I''ll trade you."'
+			'The lift you up into doggystyle, their hands help hold you steady as one of them slips his dick in your pussy and the other shoves his cock in your mouth.'
+			'The guys start laughing, obviously having fun fucking you as they talk and joke to each other. "She''s still a bit young, I think she might be Anya''s little sister."'
+			'"Fuck I think you''re right, she''s a sweet little thing, but I don''t fuck schoolgirls." Looking at his friend getting a blowjob from you. "Hey I''ll trade you."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 			minut -= 5
@@ -1000,9 +1000,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'two_boy':
 				gs 'cum_manage'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_17.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'The guys switched places and continued to rhythmically fuck you. After they fucked you awhile, you came to their senses a bit: "Oh yeah, wake up bitch, come on suck and us fuck us harder."'
-				'Still mostly out of it you obey and began to suck harder, until he starts to cum. Then he pulls out of your mouth and splatters your entire face in his cum. The second cums quickly too, he pulls out of your pussy and splatters your ass with his cum.'
-				'After some time passed, you wanted to go find your sister.'
+				'The guys switch places and continued to rhythmically fuck you. After they fucked you awhile, you came to their senses a bit: "Oh yeah, wake up bitch, come on suck and fuck us harder."'
+				'Still mostly out of it you obey and began to suck harder, until he starts to cum. Then he pulls out of your mouth and splatters your entire face in his cum. The second guy cums quickly too, he pulls out of your pussy and splatters your ass with his cum.'
+				'After some time cleaning yourself up, you decide to go find your sister.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'group', 'unknown'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'