Jelajahi Sumber

A few tweaks, edits and fixes

Vengeance11 3 tahun lalu
induk
melakukan
a1be3518c7

+ 2 - 2
locations/AlbFatherQW.qsrc

@@ -15,7 +15,7 @@ act 'Speak with Chernov':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/image_needed.png"></center>'
 	'Chernov pulls you aside. Upon closer examination, you notice he is holstering a gun under his left armpit. "Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, I know that you are a member of Barlovskaya''s entourage. I also know that this is just a front. Their criminal activities are about to be put on hold, with or without your collaboration."
-	"Our little talk here is quite important. When this case starts getting coverage, the whole town will know about the Starlets''s secret. We''ll have to inform your parents and your school that you were an illegal prostitute for Barlovskaya. You can testify anonymously like the other girls and keep your name out of it if you wish."'
+	"Our little talk here is quite important. When this case starts getting coverage, the whole town will know about the Starlets'' secret. We''ll have to inform your parents and your school that you were an illegal prostitute for Barlovskaya. You can testify anonymously like the other girls and keep your name out of it if you wish."'
 
 	act 'Ask him what he means':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ act 'Speak with Chernov':
 				minut += 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/image_needed.png"></center>'
-				'"What is so important about Albina that the Security Service are involved?" you ask. Chernov raises a brow. "You''re a smart girl, huh? You know Boris Barlovskaya, her father? He''s a retired police officer who served as the chief of police for years." In his retirement, we believe he has formed connections with the local criminal syndicate and is bribing his successor to block any investigations."'
+				'"What is so important about Albina that the Security Service are involved?" you ask. Chernov raises a brow. "You''re a smart girl, huh? You know Boris Barlovskaya, her father? He''s a retired police officer who served as the chief of police for years. In his retirement, we believe he has formed connections with the local criminal syndicate and is bribing his successor to block any investigations."'
                 '"Your friend is our way in. All we need to do is prove that Albina''s dance troupe is actually a front for illegal prostitution. We need your statement Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>."'
 				if pcs_intel >= 75:
 					act 'Ask about Albina''s involvement':

+ 15 - 14
locations/albinaRide.qsrc

@@ -5,34 +5,35 @@ frost = 0
 menu_off = 1
 AlbinaQW['albride'] = 1
 gs 'stat'
-'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-'An SUV pulls up to you and the window rolls down. Albina smiles at you. "Let''s go to my place. We need to talk."'
+'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/event/bmw.jpg"></center>'
+'An SUV pulls up to you and the front window rolls down. Albina is sitting in the driver''s seat and she smiles at you. "Let''s go to my place. We need to talk."'
 
 act 'Get in':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
-	'You climb into the car and sit in the back seat next to Albina. A large man in a black leather jacket is in the driver''s seat.'
-	'The man puts the car in gear and starts driving through town. Albina turns to you.'
-	!!If Sveta helped Chernov
+	'You climb into the car next to Albina. She puts the car into gear and starts driving through town.'
+    !!If Sveta helped Chernov
 	if AlbinaQW['Chernov'] = 1:
-		'She smiles at you very happily. "You don''t know what good you''ve done for me <<$pcs_nickname>>. I didn''t think the Security Service would actually have jumped on the lead I gave them."'
-		'"Wait, you were their ''anonymous source'' that exposed the Starlets? Why?" you ask in surprise.'
-		'"I have my reasons. The main thing is that you and the other girls all testified against the ringleader and took them down." She looks away meekly as she finishes her sentence.'	
-		'The car drives through the gate to her house and stops outside the front door. Albina tells you to follow her and exits the car.'
+	    '"Is this your car? And since when could you drive?" you ask. She laughs in response. "No, this is my father''s car. I don''t have a licence, but the police ignore me since my father was the chief."'
+		'She stops at a red light and turns to you, looking rather happy. "You don''t know what good you''ve done <<$pcs_nickname>>. I didn''t think the Security Service would actually have jumped on the lead I gave them."'
+		'"Wait, <i>you</i> were their ''anonymous source'' that exposed the Starlets? Why?" you ask in surprise.'
+		'"I have my reasons. The main thing is that you and the other girls all testified against the ringleader and took them down." She looks away meekly as she finishes her sentence and the light turns green. She continues driving in silence.'	
+		*nl
+		'After driving for a while, you reach her house. She drives through the gate and stops outside the front door. She tells you to follow her and exits the car.'
 	end
 	!!If Sveta did not help Chernov
 	if AlbinaQW['Chernov'] = 2:
+		'"Is this your car? And since when could you drive?" you ask. She laughs in response. "No, this is my father''s car. I don''t have a licence, but the police ignore me since my father was the chief."'
 		'"I really wish you had told that man everything he was asking for <<$pcs_nickname>>. It would have been very helpful to me."'
 		'"What do you mean ''helpful to you?'' He was trying to get me to speak out against the Starlets." you reply.'
+		*nl
 		'Yes, because I wanted him to expose us. I gave him the evidence he needed to take down the ringleader."'
-		'"You''re the ''anonymous source''? Why?" you ask in confusion. "I have my reasons." is all she says in reply and turns to look out the window.' 
-		'The car drives through the gate of her house and stops outside the front door. Albina tells you to follow her and exits the car.'
+		'"Wait a second. <i>You''re</i> the ''anonymous source''? Why?" you ask in confusion. "I have my reasons." is all she says in reply and continues driving in silence.' 
+		'After driving for a while, you reach her house. She drives through the gate and stops outside the front door. She tells you to follow her and exits the car.'
 	end
 
-!! Can this lead to the scene where Albina sits Sveta down for some wine and admits everything to her?
-	act 'Go with Albina':gt 'albinahome', 'start' 
+    act 'Go with Albina':gt 'albinahome', 'start' 
 end
 
 --- albinaRide ---------------------------------

+ 41 - 40
locations/albinahome.qsrc

@@ -36,17 +36,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				'"Hate him that much?" you ask as you take a sip from your glass.'
 				'Albina just glares at you. "Let''s just drink." she scorns.'
 				'You sit quietly for a while, sipping your wine while Albina again gulps down the contents of her glass. She sits in silence before suddenly screaming and throwing the glass in frustration, shattering it as it hits the wall.'
-				'"Fucking bastard!! If there is a hell, there is a special place reserved just for you to suffer for what you done you fucking creep!!"'
+				'"FUCKING BASTARD!! If there is a hell, there is a special place reserved just for you to suffer for what you''ve done you fucking creep!!"'
 				act 'Ask what she''s talking about':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 15
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/comfort.jpg"></center>'
 					'"What are you talking about?" you ask, startled by her outburst. Albina looks at you meekly as tears well up in her eyes.'
-					'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, my father has raped and abused me from such an early age, I don''t even remember when it all began. I''ve spent my entire life being his plaything." she tearfully admits.'
+					'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, my father has abused me from such an early age, I don''t even remember when it all began. I''ve spent my entire life being his plaything." she tearfully admits.'
 					'"When my mother found out, he used his connections to stop her taking me with her when she left him."'
 					*nl
-					'But now that he''s going down, she came back here to live with and look after me. Get me counselling if I need it, you know? That''s why she''s always checking up on me. She''s on edge about what my father can do, even in prison."'
+					'But now that he''s going down, she''s come back to live with and look after me. Get me counselling if I need it, you know? That''s why she''s always checking up on me. She''s on edge about what my father can do, even in prison."'
 					'She continues. "The truth is his political campaign never took off. He loved abusing his position as a cop to bully others, including me, but when he retired, he didn''t have that power anymore. A political career was his chance to get that back."'
 					'"Nobody was willing to back him however." She stops talking for a few seconds and you can clearly see her hands shaking. "That''s when...that''s when he decided to...whore me out to his friends. For ''a bit of fun'' with me, they would ''donate'' to his campaign fund.". She is on the verge of bursting into tears in front of you.'
 
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/comfort.jpg"></center>'
 						'"Your own father sold your body to fund his election? That''s horrible!" you exclaim in shock.'
-						'Albina nods. "That''s right, but I wasn''t earning enough for him. That''s when he discovered my dance troupe and forced me to start selling my friends instead. I had to <<$pcs_nickname>>! I had to!" she tearfully exclaims.'
+						'Albina sits in silence before quietly nodding. "However, I wasn''t earning enough for him. That''s when he discovered my dance troupe and forced me to start selling my friends instead. I had to <<$pcs_nickname>>! I had to!" she tearfully exclaims.'
 						'"I was forced to let those fucking perverts do whatever they pleased with my friends <<$pcs_nickname>>! They were humiliated and abused for some fucking rubles! Rubles that the fucking bastard spent on his own whores that he mistreated instead of his campaign!"'
                         !! if virgin or not
 						if pcs_vag = 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0: 
@@ -73,8 +73,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							'"What did he do?" you ask.'
 							'"It was bad enough being forced to whore out my friends to abusive creeps who almost choked them to death, but......but....."'
 							'"But what?" you ask softly. She steels herself before answering you. "If I didn''t get the girl the guys wanted, my father said it was perfectly fine for them to take me and do what they wanted, even rape me." she cries.'
-							'"They would take their anger at not getting the girl they wanted out on me. I would be choked, slapped, even spat on! Some nights, I''d come home and he would berate me for not ''helping his donors'' and I would be subjected to his abuse as well."'
-							'"My dad being a pimp for underage girls who''s abused me my entire life, my friends being subjected to abusive sexual exploitation...and I...I couldn''t anything about it!" The words barely make it out of her mouth before she bursts into a flood of tears.'
+							'"They would take their anger at not getting the girl they wanted out on me. I would be choked, slapped, even spat on! Some nights, I''d come home and he would berate me for not ''helping his donors'' and I would be subjected to his abuse as well. Other times, he would bring his friends home and let them have their way with me. One guy or four, it didn''t matter to him so long as they paid.'
+							'"My dad abusing me my entire life while running a prostitution ring where my friends were subjected to abusive sexual exploitation...and I...I couldn''t anything about it!" The words barely make it out of her mouth before she bursts into a flood of tears.'
 
 							act 'Comfort her':
 								*clr & cla
@@ -82,9 +82,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/kissingattempt.jpg"></center>'
 								'You cradle her head against your chest as she sobs away, her tears soaking into your top. "Hey, hey. But you did do something about it. You went to the police and now he''s going to prison!" you reassure her while softly stroking her hair.'
-								'She sits up, her eyes puffy from crying and wipes away her tears. "Yeah, yeah you''re right <<$pcs_nickname>>. I did. I guess I just got tired of feeling helpless as my friends suffered when they didn''t deserve any of this. So I exposed him as what he is. A vile fucking creep!"'
-								'"I just want to live my life without having to fear my own father, or any other man for that matter. For the longest time, I was just too fucking submissive."'
-								'You smile at her and are about to reply when Albina closes her eyes and tilts her head towards you.'
+								'She sits up, her eyes puffy from crying and wipes away her tears. "Yeah, yeah you''re right <<$pcs_nickname>>. I just got tired of watching my friends suffer when they didn''t deserve any of this. So I exposed him as what he is. A vile fucking creep!"'
+								'"I just wanted to live my life without fearing what my own father, or any other man for that matter, would do to me. For the longest time, I was just too fucking submissive." she says before looking intently into your eyes.'
+								'You smile at her and are about to reply when she closes her eyes and tilts her head towards you.'
 								gs 'willpower', 'cuni', 'resist', 'medium'
 								if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 									act 'Pull away (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -111,7 +111,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/kissing.jpg"></center>'
 									'You''re not sure if it''s just the alcohol or if something else is compelling you, but you lean towards Albina and lock lips with her.'
-									'You feel your excitement growing as you and Albina start passionately making out with each other.'
+									'You feel your excitement growing as you and Albina start passionately making out with each other, your tongues twisting around each other in a sweet embrace.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 2
 									gs 'stat'
 									act 'Kiss':
@@ -129,10 +129,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 											*clr & cla
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lesb.jpg"></center>'
-											'Albina breaks your kiss and her hand slides out of your panties. She stands and starts undressing herself.'
+											'Albina breaks the kiss and her hand slides out of your panties. She stands and starts undressing herself.'
 											'You follow her lead and undress yourself. Once naked, she pushes you back onto the sofa and moves in on top of you, resuming your passionate makeout.'
 											'Her hand works its way back down to your wet pussy. This time, she slides her fingers inside you. A wave of pleasure runs through you and you moan into her mouth as she fingerfucks your pussy.'
-											'Your own hand begins exploring Albina''s crotch and you find her pussy is already wet. You insert a finger into her and she moans into your mouth as her pussy tightly squeezes your digit.'
+											'Your own hand begins exploring Albina''s crotch and you find her smooth pussy is already wet. You insert a finger into her and she moans into your mouth as her pussy tightly squeezes your digit.'
 											gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 											gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 5
 											gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 5
@@ -149,8 +149,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 												'You moan softly at the pleasure and grab Albina by the hips, pulling her crotch down to your face. Her legs quiver as you gently trace her labia with your tongue before you spread them and start swirling your tongue around her engorged clitoris.'
 												'You are passionately eating each other out when you hear Albina''s breathing become faster and her legs start shaking as you feel your own orgasm building within you.'
 												*nl
-												'Albina lets out a pleasured scream as her pussy twitches and sprays her juices across your face. You buckle as your own orgasm overwhelms you and you scream loudly. You both collapse in ecstasy.'
-												'Albina pulls her herself up and turns back around, cuddling into you. "I didn''t take you for a squirter!" you laugh. She smirks. "I''ve been with a few girls <<$pcs_nickname>>, but you gave me the greatest orgasm I''ve ever had! I think that was actually my first squirt!"'
+												'Albina lets out a pleasured scream as her pussy twitches and sprays a huge amount of her juices across your face. You buckle as your own orgasm overwhelms you and you scream loudly. You both collapse in ecstasy.'
+												'Albina pulls her herself up and turns back around, cuddling into you. "I didn''t take you for a squirter!" you laugh. She smirks. "I''ve been with a few girls <<$pcs_nickname>>, but you gave me the greatest orgasm I''ve ever had! I think that was the biggest squirt I''ve ever done!"'
 												'She leans over and grabs some tissues from a box on a nearby table, handing you some to clean your face. She runs her hand over her still twitching pussy. "I think I''m still cumming!" she says. You both lie on the sofa, your powerful orgasms pulsing through the both of you. You eventually recover and manage to get dressed.'
                                                 'Albina remains on the sofa, pussy juices still trickling from her. "Thanks <<$pcs_nickname>>. It was nice to let it all out and just talk about it...among other things." she smirks. "Thanks for being a good friend." You smile at her and start leaving when she suddenly embraces you in a tight hug, her breasts squeezing against you, before walking you to the door.' 
 												gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 30
@@ -187,7 +187,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
 				'"I don''t like the sweaty perverts at the gym staring at my ass, so I prefer training at home instead." she replies.'
 				'You can''t help but stare at her firm, shapely rear as she says that and she grins at you.'
-				'Eyes up here <<$pcs_nickname>>! Anyways, I could teach you about stripping and poledancing if you want."'
+				'Eyes up here <<$pcs_nickname>>! Anyway, I could teach you about stripping and poledancing if you want?"'
 				act 'No thanks': AlbinaQW['SportDay'] = daystart & gt 'albinahome', 'start'
 				act 'Teach me stripping': gt 'albinahome', 'stripping'
 				act 'Teach me poledancing': gt 'albinahome', 'poledancing'
@@ -432,7 +432,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'playgame':
 		'You laugh and nod. "Sure, but you are so going down."'
 		'She laughs in response. "You''re that sure? Then how about we make it a bit more interesting then?"'
 		'You arch your brow curiously. "What do you have in mind?"'
-		'She grins at you, gets up and goes over to her dresser. She rummages around in it for a moment before pulling out a strapon harness with a sizeable dildo attached. "I bought this the other day, just for fun. The winner gets to use it on the loser how ever they want." she says with a smirk.'
+		'She grins at you, gets up and goes over to her dresser. She rummages around in it for a moment before pulling out a strapon harness with a large black dildo attached. "I bought this the other day, just for fun. The winner gets to use it on the loser how ever they want." she says with a smirk.'
 
 		gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -447,7 +447,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'playgame':
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'You shake your head. "Uhhh...I''m really not interested in doing that."'
-				'Albina puts the strapon away and you can tell she is a little disappointed. She comes back over and lays down beside you again. "You are so going to lose!" she laughs. You continue to play games for a while, although things are awkward between you. Eventually, Albina stops. "Well I had fun, but there is some stuff I need to take care of." she says as she turns the consloe off.'
+				'Albina puts the strapon away and you can tell she is a little disappointed. She comes back over and lies down beside you again. "You are so going to lose!" she laughs. You continue to play games for a while, although things are awkward between you. Eventually, Albina stops. "Well I had fun, but there is some stuff I need to take care of." she says as she turns the consloe off.'
 				'Getting the hint, you get up as well. "Yeah, I should probably get going myself." You exchange a brief hug before you leave.'
 				act 'Say goodbye and go home':gt 'pav_residential'
 			end
@@ -477,7 +477,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'game_bet':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/game.jpg"></center>'
 	'You stare at the size of the attached dildo. "Where and when did you get that?!" you laugh. "Whatever, you''re on. You are so going to get fucked!"'
-	'Albina laughs as she brings the strapon over with a bottle of lube, placing them on the floor. She lays back down beside you and picks her controller up. "Please! You are so going to lose." She starts the game and you both fall silent, your focus only on winning.'
+	'Albina laughs as she brings the strapon over with a bottle of lube, placing them on the floor. She lies back down beside you and picks her controller up. "Please! You are so going to lose." She starts the game and you both fall silent, your focus only on winning.'
 	act 'Play until someone wins':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
@@ -517,24 +517,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wear_strapon':
 	npc_sex['A23'] += 1
 	lesbian += 1
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/straponsuck.jpg"></center>'
-	'With the strapon firmly in place, you get on the bed with her and pull her head down to the dildo. "Suck my dick loser!" you giggle.'
-	'She laughs and gets down on all fours. She takes the dildo in her mouth and starts sucking while stroking the shaft with one hand. You spend several minutes making her suck on the dildo, getting it nice and wet with her drool.'
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/bj.jpg"></center>'
+	'With the strapon firmly in place, you stand next to the bed and pull her head down to the dildo. "Suck my dick loser!" you giggle.'
+	'She laughs before she takes the dildo in her mouth and starts sucking while stroking the shaft with one hand. You spend several minutes making her suck on the dildo, getting it nice and wet with her drool.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Fuck her pussy':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'boyStat', 'D3'
 		gs 'stat'
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/givevag1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You pull away until the dildo slides out of her mouth and then lay on your back. "Come and ride it cowgirl!" you laugh. She crawls up and straddles you, lowering herself down until the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo slides easily inside of her wet pussy, causing her to moan in pleasure. She starts riding you slowly, but picks up speed, moaning louder and louder.'
+		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/givevag.jpg"></center>'
+		'You pull away until the dildo slides out of her mouth, climb onto the bed next to her and lie on your back. "Come and ride it cowgirl!" you laugh. She straddles you and lowers herself down until the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo slides easily inside of her wet pussy, causing her to moan in pleasure. She starts riding you slowly, but picks up speed, moaning louder and louder.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap_give', 8, 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Fuck her ass': gt 'albinahome', 'fuck_albina_ass'
 		act 'Ride it like you mean it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
-			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/givevag2.jpg"></center>'
+			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/givevag.jpg"></center>'
 			'You slap her on the ass. "Come on Albina! Ride it like you mean it." With your encouragement, she starts really riding you hard and fast, her huge ass slapping against your thighs as she takes the whole length inside her. She rides you for several minutes until she cries out in ecstasy. She slams down on the dildo and her body shudders as an intense orgasm passes through her. She slides off the dildo, which glistens with her juices, and collapses on the bed next to you.'
 			'Once her orgasm has passed, she looks at you with an appreciative smile on her face.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap_give', 7, 'lesbian'
@@ -553,7 +553,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuck_albina_ass':
 	lesbian += 1
 	gs 'boyStat', 'D3'
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/giveanal1.jpg"></center>'
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/anal1.jpg"></center>'
 	'Albina then leans over and whispers in your ear. "I want you to fuck my ass <<$pcs_nickname>>..." You grin as she giggles and gets on all fours. You grab the bottle of lube and squirt some onto the dildo, rubbing it up and down the shaft until it is very slick. You then spread her huge ass cheeks and rub the excess onto her asshole. You grab her ass in your hand and appreciate how firms it feels in your grip.'
 	'"Like what you see?" she giggles. You kneel down behind her, line the head of the dildo up with her asshole and slowly push forward. There is a bit of resistance, but with a little more pressure the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo pops into her ass. She moans in a mixture of pain and pleasure as you start off with slow shallow strokes, but as her groans of pain turn into moans of pleasure, you take deeper and faster strokes. You look down and admit that her ass is amazing, the dildo being enveloped by her huge, firm cheeks as you thrust in and out of her hole.' 
 	'You wonder how the guys in your class would feel knowing you''re actually fucking the best ass in school while they can only dream of it. After a few minutes, you pull out of her and she looks back over her shoulder, obviously wondering why you stopped.'
@@ -563,7 +563,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuck_albina_ass':
 	act 'Keep fucking her ass':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/giveanal2.jpg"></center>'
+		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/anal2.jpg"></center>'
 		'"Come on <<$pcs_nickname>>. Put it back in and fuck me....hard." she says while wiggling her hips. You smile at her and slide the dildo back into her hole with ease, making her moan in pleasure. You grab onto her hips and start fucking her balls deep, filling her ass with the entire dildo. After several minutes, you feel her ass tighten around your fake cock and she cries out as her body is rocked by an intense orgasm and juices squirt from her pussy. You keep fucking her throughout her orgasm, only pulling out once her shudders have passed.'
 		'After you''ve pulled out, she inserts a few fingers into her gaping hole as juices continue leaking from her pussy. "Oh fuck yes <<$pcs_nickname>>! That was fucking amazing!"'
 		'"Fucking such a nice looking ass was amazing!" you reply and you both laugh.'
@@ -579,18 +579,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'receive_strapon':
 	npc_sex['A23'] += 1
 	lesbian += 1
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/straponsuck.jpg"></center>'
-	'You slide your panties off while she tightens the strapon firmly in place. You climb on the bed and she pulls your head down to the dildo. "Suck my dick loser!" she says with a giggle.'
-	'You take the dildo into your mouth and start sucking on it while stroking the shaft with one hand. "Yeah, just like that <<$pcs_nickname>>!" she moans as she reaches between the straps and gently rubs her pussy. You spend several minutes sucking on the dildo, getting it nice and wet with your drool. She pulls it out of your mouth. "I''m so going to enjoy fucking you!"'
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/bj.jpg"></center>'
+	'You slide your panties off while she tightens the strapon firmly in place, standing next to the bed. You lie down next to her and she pulls your head down to the dildo. "Suck my dick loser!" she says with a giggle.'
+	'You take the dildo into your mouth and start sucking on it while stroking the shaft with one hand. "Yeah, just like that <<$pcs_nickname>>!" she moans as she reaches between the straps and gently rubs her pussy. You spend several minutes sucking on the dildo, getting it nice and wet with your drool before she pulls it out of your mouth. "I''m so going to enjoy fucking you!"'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
 		act 'You''re a virgin':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
-			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/straponsuck.jpg"></center>'
+			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/bj.jpg"></center>'
 			'You blush deeply and she looks at you. "Oh, right. You haven''t done this before." she says, remembering that you''re still pure.'
-			'You blush even more. "Yes, I''m still a virgin." you reply.'
+			'You blush even more. "Yes, I''m... still a virgin." you reply.'
 			'"Well, I can just fuck your ass if you want?" Then she grins. "Unless you want me to pop your cherry that is?"'
 			act 'Just fuck my ass': gt 'albinahome', 'albina_ass_fucks_you'
 			act 'Get your cherry popped':
@@ -598,8 +598,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'receive_strapon':
 				gs 'boyStat', 'D3'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/getvag1.jpg"></center>'
-				'She nods. "OK, don''t worry. I''l be gentle since it is your first time. Lay on your back and spread your legs." You do as she commands and she scoots up between your legs. She rubs your pussy with her fingers a bit to make sure it is wet enough. She adds a little lube to the dildo anyway and you feel it rubbing against your slit, causing it to open a bit. She then slowly slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo into your virgin pussy.' 
-				'It is both painful and pleasurable at the same time and you moan a bit as she slowly starts to fuck your pussy. After a few minutes, it starts to hurt less but she stops. "OK that''s enough. I don''t want to wear it out the first time, but I''m not finished with you. Roll over so I can fuck that tight little ass of yours."'
+				'You give her an awkward smile. "I... I want you to... take me. My... virginity, that is." you tell her as your cheeks burn bright red.' 
+				'She smiles back. "OK, don''t worry. I''ll be gentle since it''s your first time. Just lie on your back and spread your legs." You do as she commands and she climbs onto the bed and scoots in between your legs. She rubs your pussy with her fingers a bit to make sure it is wet enough. She adds a little lube to the dildo anyway and you feel it rubbing against your slit. She then slowly slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo into your virgin pussy.' 
+				'It is both painful and pleasurable at the same time and you moan softly as she slowly starts to fuck your pussy. After a few minutes, it starts to hurt less but she stops. "OK that''s enough. I don''t want to wear it out the first time, but I''m not finished with you yet. Roll over so I can fuck that tight little ass of yours."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 5, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Take it up the ass': gt 'albinahome', 'albina_ass_fucks_you'
@@ -611,14 +612,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'receive_strapon':
 			gs 'boyStat', 'D3'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/getvag1.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Lay on your back and spread your legs." You do as she commands and she scoots up between your legs. She rubs your pussy with her fingers a bit to make sure it is wet enough and then slowly slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo inside you. You moan a bit as she slowly starts to fuck your pussy. As you start to moan louder, she starts fucking you a little faster.'
+			'"Lie on your back and spread your legs." You do as she commands and she climbs onto the bed and scoots in between your legs. She rubs your pussy with her fingers a bit to make sure it is wet enough and then slowly slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo inside you. You moan a bit as she slowly starts to fuck your pussy. As you start to moan louder, she starts fucking you a little faster.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 8, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Keep getting your pussy fucked':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/getvag2.jpg"></center>'
-				'She reads your body well. She fucks you harder and faster the more you moan, but when it starts to get a little too rough she backs off a bit. She eventually finds a near perfect rhythm and you can feel youself getting wet. She is enjoying it as much as you, moaning softly and squeezing her breast as she fucks you. She stops and pulls out. "OK that''s enough of that, but I''m not finished with you just yet. Roll over so I can fuck that tight little ass of yours."'
+				'She proceeds to fuck you hard, but not too hard, settling into a near perfect rhythm that you enjoy, feeling youself slowly getting wetter. She seems to be enjoying it as much as you, moaning softly and squeezing her breast as she fucks you. She leans in and kisses you before suddenly stopping and pulling out. "OK that''s enough of that, but I''m not finished with you just yet. Roll over so I can fuck that tight little ass of yours."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 7, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Take it up the ass': gt 'albinahome', 'albina_ass_fucks_you'
@@ -634,15 +635,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina_ass_fucks_you':
 	lesbian += 1
 	gs 'boyStat', 'D3'
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/getanal1.jpg"></center>'
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/anal1.jpg"></center>'
 	'As you get on all fours, you glance back and see her applying lube to the dildo. She squirts plenty on the dildo and strokes the shaft with it, getting it nice and lubed up. She then rubs the excess lube onto your asshole. You and the dildo now lubed up, she moves behind you and you feel the dildo press against your asshole. The pressure builds up until the tip pops into your ass, causing you to groan slightly in pain. She slowly starts to slide the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo up your ass, steadily working it deeper.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Get your ass hammered':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/getanal2.jpg"></center>'
-		'After you seem to be used to her in your ass, she stands up over you and starts getting harder and faster with the ass fucking she is giving you. When it starts getting a little too rough, she seems to notice and backs off just a little before getting into a nice rhythm of slamming the dildo in and out of your ass. She enjoys fucking you hard, growing more aroused over time.' 
+		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/anal2.jpg"></center>'
+		'Once you are comfortable with her in your ass, she stands up over you and starts getting harder and faster with the ass fucking she is giving you. When it starts getting a little too rough, she seems to notice and backs off just a little before getting into a nice rhythm of slamming the dildo in and out of your ass. She enjoys fucking you hard, growing more aroused over time.' 
 		'Just as it is starting to hurt, she stops and lets out a pleasured moan before pulling out of you. You feel a rush of cold air around your gaping asshole. "You were such a good little butt slut <<$pcs_nickname>>." she says. You turn and see her sliding the harness off, apparently finished with you. You notice the wet patch on the bed. She obviously greatly enjoyed hammering your ass.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 10, 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -657,12 +658,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strapon_finish':
 	lesbian += 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/aftermath.jpg"></center>'
-	'Albina embraces you and you spend the next few minutes passionately making out while fondling each other. Eventually, you both get dressed and she takes the strapon and cleans it before putting it away. Not long after, her phone buzzes. She looks at it, obviously reading a text message and frowns. "Sorry, but I need to go <<$pcs_nickname>>. I did have fun though. I''ll see later?"'
+	'Albina embraces you and you collapse onto the bed, entwined. You spend the next few minutes passionately making out while fondling each other. Eventually, you both get dressed and she takes the strapon and cleans it before putting it away. Not long after, her phone buzzes. She looks at it, obviously reading a text message and frowns. "Sorry, but I need to go <<$pcs_nickname>>. I did have fun though. I''ll see later?"'
 	'You nod in understanding. "Sure, not a problem. I had fun too." you smirk. "I''ll see you later." You share a final kiss with each other before you leave.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
-	act 'Say goodbye and go home':gt 'pav_residential'
+	act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 end
 
 --- albinahome ---------------------------------

+ 4 - 4
locations/albinaporog.qsrc

@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ if hour >= 17 and week < 6 and kanikuli = 0 and hour < 20 or hour >= 9 and week
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinahome.jpg"></center>'
 	if AlbinaQW['StarletsShutDown'] = 0:
 		'You push a button on the intercom and a deep voice crackles through the speaker, asking you to state your name and purpose of your visit.'
-		'You say that you''re here to visit Albina. After a brief wait, the gate opens. "Albina is waiting for you in her room." the voice says.'
+		'You say that you''re here to visit Albina and after a brief wait, the gate opens. "A friend of Albina''s is <i>always</i> welcome here." the voice says with an unsettling chuckle. "Albina is in her room."'
 		act 'Enter the house':gt 'albinahome', 'start'
 	elseif AlbinaQW['AfterFatherCheck'] = 0:
     	!!The first time after Albina exposes her father
@@ -16,14 +16,14 @@ if hour >= 17 and week < 6 and kanikuli = 0 and hour < 20 or hour >= 9 and week
 		act 'Enter the house':gt 'albinahome', 'start'
 	else
 		!!From then on
-		'You push a button on the intercom and you hear the familiar voice of Albina''s mother on the other end. You tell it''s you and she opens the gate.'
+		'You push a button on the intercom and you hear the familiar voice of Albina''s mother on the other end. You tell her it''s you and she opens the gate.'
 		'"She really enjoys having you come round and visit her you know? It''s good for her to have such a dependable friend to rely on after everything she''s been through." she adds.'
 		act 'Enter the house':gt 'albinahome', 'start'
 	end
 else
 	if AlbinaQW['StarletsShutDown'] = 0:
-		if hour >= 9:'You push a button on the intercom and a voice booms through from the other end. You say that you''re here to visit Albina. "Albina is currently not at home. Come back later he replies."'
-		if hour < 9:'You push a button on the intercom and the voice at the other end says "It''s too early. Come back no earlier than nine."'
+		if hour >= 9:'You push a button on the intercom and the deep voice booms through from the other end. You say that you''re here to visit Albina. "She isn''t here. Come back later." he abruptly replies in an annoyed tone before hanging up.'
+		if hour < 9:'You push a button on the intercom and the voice at the other end says "It''s too early to visit. Come back later."'
 	else
 		!!After Albina exposes her father
 		if hour >= 9:'You push a button on the intercom and a female voice comes through asking who it is. When you say you''re here to see Albina, she tells you that Albina is currently unavailable and you should come back later.'

+ 55 - 55
locations/din_van.qsrc

@@ -70,16 +70,16 @@ $shower = {
 
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/bathroom/dush.mp4"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You undress and turn on the water in the shower. When it hits the right temperature you enter the shower and let the warm water rain down on you.'
+		'You undress and turn on the water in the shower. When it hits the right temperature, you step into the shower and let the warm water rain down on you.'
 		if daystart < 10 and (StoryLine = 0 or (StoryLine = 1 and csb_start = 1)) and ntstart = 0:
 			pcs_horny += rand(6,10)
-			'It''s really arousing to see your new body with all its smooth curves, breasts with large nipples, wide hips, and smooth legs. You begin to lather your body noticing how soft and tender it feels. Once you''re sure you didn''t miss a single spot on your feminine body you begin to wash yourself off, continuing to experience new and strange sensations.'
+			'It''s really arousing to see your new body with all its smooth curves, breasts with large nipples, wide hips and smooth legs. You begin to lather your body, noticing how soft and tender it feels. Once you''re sure you haven''t missed a single spot, you begin to wash yourself off, continuing to experience new and strange sensations.'
 		elseif daystart < 30 and (StoryLine = 0 or (StoryLine = 1 and csb_start = 1)) and ntstart = 0:
 			pcs_horny += rand(2,6)
-			'You have already gotten used to your feminine body and its softness doesn''t surprise you very much anymore. But you still let your hands wander a bit over your soft curves before you begin to wash yourself in earnest.'
+			'You''ve already gotten used to your feminine body and its softness doesn''t surprise you very much anymore, but you still let your hands wander a bit over your soft curves before you begin to wash yourself in earnest.'
 		else
 			pcs_horny += rand(0,2)
-			''+iif(noShampoo_tmp = 1, 'It''s not your shampoo, so you use a little more than you normally would; with a tinge of guilt you ', 'Using your own shampoo, you carefully ')+'soap yourself trying not to miss any spot and then wash off.'
+			''+iif(noShampoo_tmp = 1, 'It''s not your shampoo, so you use a little more than you normally would; with a tinge of guilt you ', 'Using your own shampoo, you carefully ')+'lather yourself up, trying not to miss any spots, and then wash off.'
 		end
 
 		if shampoo = 0 and noShampoo_tmp = 1:
@@ -106,16 +106,16 @@ $shower = {
 
 		if lactation['active'] > 0 and pain['nipples'] < 60 and lactation['pc_aware'] <= 0:
 			if pcs_usedbreastpumponherself > 0 and pcs_massagedherbreasts <= 0:
-				'During showering you clean your breasts and something catches your eye. White drops come from your nipples. It is milk.<br>Using the breast pump regularly probably made you lactate!'
+				'As you clean your breasts, something catches your eye. White drops come from your nipples. It is milk.<br>Using the breast pump regularly probably made you lactate!'
 				lactation['induced'] = 1
 			elseif pcs_usedbreastpumponherself <= 0 and pcs_massagedherbreasts > 0:
-				'During showering you clean your breasts and something catches your eye. White drops come from your nipples. It is milk. Regularly massaging your breasts probably made you lactate!<br>'
+				'As you clean your breasts, something catches your eye. White drops come from your nipples. It is milk. Regularly massaging your breasts probably made you lactate!<br>'
 				lactation['induced'] = 1
 			elseif pcs_usedbreastpumponherself > 0 and pcs_massagedherbreasts > 0:
-				'During showering you clean your breasts and something catches your eye. White drops come from your nipples. It is milk. All that pumping and massaging your breasts probably caused you to lactate!<br>'
+				'As you clean your breasts, something catches your eye. White drops come from your nipples. It is milk. All that pumping and massaging your breasts probably caused you to lactate!<br>'
 				lactation['induced'] = 1
 			else
-				'During showering you clean your breasts and something catches your eye. White drops come from your nipples. To your surprise it is milk. You started lactating!<br>'
+				'As you clean your breasts, something catches your eye. White drops come from your nipples. You find, to your surprise, that it is milk. You have started lactating!<br>'
 				if thinkpreg = 1 or knowpreg = 1:
 					'This is probably happening because you are pregnant.'
 				else
@@ -165,7 +165,7 @@ $shower = {
 
 		if vanr_lock = 0 and $loc = 'vanrPar':
 			*nl
-			'In your absentmindedness you forgot to close the door.'
+			'In your absentmindedness, you have forgotton to close the door.'
 			'The idea that the door is open occupies your mind while you are showering. It would be very embarrassing if your brother or stepfather looked in at the wrong time.'
 			if indorf = 0: gs 'vanrPar', 'peek'
 		end
@@ -194,12 +194,12 @@ $bath = {
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bathroom/wash4.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'While the bathtub fills up you get undressed and then dip a toe into the water. It has just the right temperature so you climb in and let yourself sink into the warm water.'
+		'You undress while the bathtub fills up and dip a toe into the water. It is just the right temperature, so you climb in and let yourself sink into the warm water, moaning softly as you feel your muscles start to relax.'
 
 		if daystart < 10 and StoryLine = 0 and ntstart = 0:
 			pcs_horny += rand(6,10)
-			'You stare at those smooth, soft legs sticking out of the water. You''re still not used to this new body and the look of all this roundness.'
-			'Starting to soap yourself you unwittingly turn your attention to your breasts. They''re so soft and big, and when you touch them you feel an unfamiliar but pleasant sensation. You take your time getting familiar with your new body, then you begin to wash yourself in earnest.'
+			'You stare at the smooth, soft legs sticking out of the water. You''re still not used to this new body and the look of all this roundness.'
+			'As you start to soap yourself, you unwittingly turn your attention to your breasts. They''re so soft and big, and when you touch them you feel an unfamiliar but pleasant sensation. You take your time getting familiar with your new body, then you begin to wash yourself in earnest.'
 		elseif daystart < 30 and StoryLine = 0 and ntstart = 0:
 			pcs_horny += rand(2,6)
 			'You have become a little accustomed to your female body and casually soap up all these soft curves and rinse yourself off, rubbing your hands all over your feminine body to make sure you didn''t miss a spot.'
@@ -289,7 +289,7 @@ $brit = {
 				*nl
 				if daystart < 10 and StoryLine = 0 and ntstart = 0:
 					'You can''t shake off the fact that you''re a girl now, so you decide it''d be best to shave your legs. You begin to lather your legs, still marveling at how soft and round they are. Then you take the razor in your hand and begin to shave your legs.'
-					'You feel really awkward, never having done this before as a guy. Luckily, you had more than enough experience with shaving your face and technically this isn''t really all that different. So in the end you get a pretty decent job done.'
+					'You feel really awkward, never having done this before as a guy. Luckily, you had more than enough experience with shaving your face and technically this isn''t really all that different. In the end, you get a pretty decent job done.'
 				elseif daystart < 30 and StoryLine = 0 and ntstart = 0:
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'With a newfound routine you lather up your legs and start shaving, careful not to miss a spot. After washing away the foam you softly glide your hands over your smooth legs, feeling good to know that you don''t need to hide your legs in pants. Maybe you should wear a skirt tomorrow?'
@@ -320,7 +320,7 @@ $brit = {
 					*nl
 					if daystart < 10 and StoryLine = 0 and ntstart = 0:
 						'You can''t shake off the fact that you''re a girl now, so you decide it''d be best to shave your legs. You begin to lather your legs, still marveling at how soft and round they are. Then you take the razor in your hand and begin to shave your legs.'
-						'You feel really awkward, never having done this before as a guy. Luckily, you had more than enough experience with shaving your face and technically this isn''t really all that different. So in the end you get a pretty decent job done.'
+						'You feel really awkward, never having done this before as a guy. Luckily, you had more than enough experience with shaving your face and technically this isn''t really all that different. In the end, you get a pretty decent job done.'
 					elseif daystart < 30 and StoryLine = 0 and ntstart = 0:
 						pcs_mood += 10
 						'With a newfound routine you lather up your legs and start shaving, careful not to miss a spot. After washing away the foam you softly glide your hands over your smooth legs, feeling good to know that you don''t need to hide your legs in pants. Maybe you should wear a skirt tomorrow?'
@@ -348,7 +348,7 @@ $brit = {
 					if obdysh = 1 and rand(0, 5) = 5:gt 'vann', 'brit1'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bathroom/shave3.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You lather your crotch with some soapy water and carefully shave your pubic hair. After shaving you can''t help but run your fingers over your pussy, enjoying the smooth feeling and getting slightly more aroused by the touch.'
+					'You lather your crotch with some soapy water and carefully shave your pubic hair. After you''re done, you can''t help but run your fingers over your pussy, enjoying the smooth feeling and getting slightly more aroused by the touch.'
 					dynamic $dryOff
 					gs'selfplay','bathtub_dildo_check'
 					gs'selfplay','shower_dildo_check'
@@ -364,7 +364,7 @@ $brit = {
 					if obdysh = 1 and rand(0, 5) = 5:gt 'vann', 'brit1'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bathroom/shave4.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'You spend some time carefully shaving your pubic hair to your desired shape, and then trim it to make it neat and tidy.'
+					'You spend some time carefully shaving your pubic hair to your desired shape before trimming it to make it neat and tidy.'
 					dynamic $dryOff
 					gs'selfplay','bathtub_dildo_check'
 					gs'selfplay','shower_dildo_check'
@@ -421,7 +421,7 @@ $brit = {
 				*nl
 				if daystart < 10 and StoryLine = 0 and ntstart = 0:
 					'You can''t shake off the fact that you''re a girl now, so you decide it''d be best to shave your legs. You begin to lather your legs, still marveling at how soft and round they are. Then you take the razor in your hand and begin to shave your legs.'
-					'You feel really awkward, never having done this before as a guy. Luckily, you had more than enough experience with shaving your face and technically this isn''t really all that different. So in the end you get a pretty decent job done.'
+					'You feel really awkward, never having done this before as a guy. Luckily, you had more than enough experience with shaving your face and technically this isn''t really all that different. In the end, you get a pretty decent job done.'
 				elseif daystart < 30 and StoryLine = 0 and ntstart = 0:
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'With a newfound routine you lather up your legs and start shaving, careful not to miss a spot. After washing away the foam you softly glide your hands over your smooth legs, feeling good to know that you don''t need to hide your legs in pants. Maybe you should wear a skirt tomorrow?'
@@ -973,7 +973,7 @@ $toymanage = {
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/body/analplug.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You squat and tug gently at the butt plug, gasping as you push it out of you. You can''t help but feel a bit empty, now that it''s out.' & !!0.2.6: Removed unneccessary var check
+			'You squat and tug gently at the butt plug, gasping as you push it out. You can''t help but feel a bit empty now that it''s out.' & !!0.2.6: Removed unneccessary var check
 
 			act 'Finish':menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
@@ -991,8 +991,8 @@ $toymanage = {
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/body/analplug.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			if butpluguse > 0:'You squat and gently rub the butt plug against your anus, after lubricating it with a bit of saliva. After a short while, you''ve relaxed enough to be able to push it in. Once it''s in you give it a few gentle tugs, wondering if anyone will catch you wearing it today.'
-			if butpluguse = 0:butpluguse = 1 & '"If I''m not going to use it, then why did I buy it?" you ask yourself. You look at the butt plug for a while, thinking "It is necessary to start developing my ass, so I could have great adventures someday... you could even say huge and thick adventures with crimson heads, uh, now I got carried away..." You''re slightly embarrassed at the thought for a second, but are then overcome by your horny fantasies. Determined to get the plug all the way in, you slowly press it against your asshole after lubricating it with a bit of saliva. It hurts a bit at first, but once the thickest part is in the rest follows rather easily. Patting yourself on your ass once it''s in, you wonder if anyone will notice you''re wearing it today and then immediately feel naughty for even having thought that.'
+			if butpluguse > 0:'You squat and gently rub the butt plug against your anus after lubricating it with a bit of saliva. After a few minutes, you''ve relaxed enough to be able to push it in. Once it''s in, you give it a few gentle tugs, wondering if anyone will catch you wearing it today.'
+			if butpluguse = 0:butpluguse = 1 & '"If I''m not going to use it, then why did I buy it?" you ask yourself. You look at the butt plug for a while, thinking "It is necessary to start developing my ass so I can have great adventures someday... You could even say huge and thick adventures with crimson heads..." You''re slightly embarrassed at the thought for a second, but are then overcome by your horny fantasies. Determined to get the plug all the way in, you lubricate your anus with your saliva and push the butt plug against it. It hurts a bit at first, but once the thickest part is in the rest follows rather easily. Patting yourself on your ass once it''s in, you wonder if anyone will notice you''re wearing it and then immediately feel naughty for even having thought that.'
 
 			act 'Finish':menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
@@ -1146,7 +1146,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'private':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 5
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/citycenter/photo/dress.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You get dressed'
+				'You get dressed.'
 				gs 'clothing', 'wear_last_worn'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Return': menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -1156,7 +1156,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'private':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 5
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/undress1.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You remove your clothing'
+				'You remove your clothing.'
 				gs 'clothing', 'strip'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Return': menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -1263,12 +1263,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'misery':
 			husporday = daystart
 			'The washing machine washed your husband''s dirty laundry.'
 		elseif poroshok < 1:
-			'You ran out of washing powder for the washing machine.'
+			'You have run out of washing powder for the washing machine.'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if husband > 0 and husbanday > 0 and husporday ! daystart and poroshok >= 2:
-		act 'Wash your husbands clothes (2 units of washing powder) (1:00)':
+		act 'Wash your husband''s clothes (2 units of washing powder) (1:00)':
 			*clr & cla
 			husband += 5
 			poroshok -= 2
@@ -1303,8 +1303,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buffpick':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/exercise/fit2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'While drying off and getting dressed you examine the sleek muscles that are showing through your skin.'
-	'As you do so you think about how you look and decide:'
+	'While drying off and getting dressed, you examine the sleek muscles that are showing through your skin.'
+	'As you do so, you think about how you look and decide:'
 	act 'You like how you look.': normbuffpick = 2 & mirror_steam = hour & menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	act 'You don''t like how you look.': nrmbfpckct += 1 & normbuffpick = 0 & mirror_steam = hour & menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
@@ -1319,15 +1319,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'HorrifiedReact1':
 		if stat['hidden_vaginal'] > 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 1:
 			'You don''t even know how this is possible. You''ve never even had sex with anyone.'
 			'What did you do to deserve this? What is everyone going to think of you? Your life is ruined.'
-			'After several minutes of sobbing and trying to make sense of your situation, you finally pull yourself off of the floor. You straighten your clothes and wash your face as you begin to accept the situation youre stuck with.'
+			'After several minutes of sobbing and trying to make sense of your situation, you finally pull yourself off of the floor. You straighten your clothes and wash your face as you begin to accept the situation you''re stuck with.'
 		elseif rape > 0 and stat['vaginal'] > 1:
-			'It’s bad enough that you were raped, but possibly getting pregnant from it as well? It’s completely unfair.'
+			'It’s bad enough that you were raped, but possibly getting pregnant from it as well? It’s completely unfair!'
 			'What did you do to deserve this? What is everyone going to think of you? Your life is ruined.'
-			'After several minutes of sobbing and trying to make sense of your situation, you finally pull yourself off of the floor. You straighten your clothes and wash your face as you begin to accept the situation youre stuck with.'
+			'After several minutes of sobbing and trying to make sense of your situation, you finally pull yourself off of the floor. You straighten your clothes and wash your face as you begin to accept the situation you''re stuck with.'
 		else
 			'This is the worst possible thing that could have happened to you. You feel like you''re going to vomit from the stress.'
 			'What did you do to deserve this? What is everyone going to think of you? Your life is ruined.'
-			'After several minutes of sobbing and trying to make sense of your situation, you finally pull yourself off of the floor. You straighten your clothes and wash your face as you begin to accept the situation youre stuck with.'
+			'After several minutes of sobbing and trying to make sense of your situation, you finally pull yourself off of the floor. You straighten your clothes and wash your face as you begin to accept the situation you''re stuck with.'
 		end
 	act 'Finish' :menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
@@ -1341,13 +1341,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ConcernedReact1':
 	'Your mind races as you gaze at the test in your hand. The two strips clearly show that you''re pregnant. You know this isn''t the worst thing that could happen to you, but your life is definitely going to change. Are you even ready for that kind of change?'
 		if stat['hidden_vaginal'] > 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 1:
 			'The worst part about this whole situation is that you don''t even know how this happened. How can you get pregnant without having sex?'
-			'After a few minutes of weighing your options, you choose to get on with your day. You still have a lot to consider before you can decide what to do about this pregnancy, but you can’t spend all day in the bathroom without drawing suspicion.'
+			'After spending a few minutes weighing your options, you choose to get on with your day. You still have a lot to consider before you can decide what to do about this pregnancy, but you can’t spend all day in the bathroom without drawing suspicion.'
 		elseif rape > 0 and stat['vaginal'] > 1:
 			'The worst part about this whole situation is that this isn''t even your fault. This was forced on you.'
-			'After a few minutes of weighing your options, you choose to get on with your day. You still have a lot to consider before you can decide what to do about this pregnancy, but you can’t spend all day in the bathroom without drawing suspicion.'
+			'After spending a few minutes weighing your options, you choose to get on with your day. You still have a lot to consider before you can decide what to do about this pregnancy, but you can’t spend all day in the bathroom without drawing suspicion.'
 		else
 			'On some level, you''re aware that this is a consequence of your own actions, but you''re not quite ready to come to terms with that.'
-			'After a few minutes of weighing your options, you choose to get on with your day. You still have a lot to consider before you can decide what to do about this pregnancy, but you can’t spend all day in the bathroom without drawing suspicion.'
+			'After spending a few minutes weighing your options, you choose to get on with your day. You still have a lot to consider before you can decide what to do about this pregnancy, but you can’t spend all day in the bathroom without drawing suspicion.'
 		end
 	act 'Finish' :menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
@@ -1361,13 +1361,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ExcitedReact1':
 	'You''re overcome with glee as you look at the pregnancy test in your hand. Its two strips confirm that your wish has been granted: you are pregnant. You giggle as you clutch the pregnancy test, excited to share the news with everyone you know.'
 		if stat['hidden_vaginal'] > 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 1:
 			'You''re not sure how this happened, but you''re not going to complain. Who cares if a miracle made it happen?'
-			'You spend the next several minutes fantasizing about your entry into parenthood before you remember you have places you need to be. You finally get up, still giddy as you go on with your day.'
+			'You spend several minutes fantasizing about your entry into parenthood before you remember you have places you need to be. You finally get up, still giddy as you go on with your day.'
 		elseif rape > 0 and stat['vaginal'] > 1:
 			'You don’t even care about the circumstances that got you pregnant. It was absolutely worth it for this moment.'
-			'You spend the next several minutes fantasizing about your entry into parenthood before you remember you have places you need to be. You finally get up, still giddy as you go on with your day.'
+			'You spend several minutes fantasizing about your entry into parenthood before you remember you have places you need to be. You finally get up, still giddy as you go on with your day.'
 		else
-			'Every time you had sex, you hoped the act would make you into a mother.'
-			'You spend the next several minutes fantasizing about your entry into parenthood before you remember you have places you need to be. You finally get up, still giddy as you go on with your day.'
+			'Every time you''ve had sex, you hoped the act would make you into a mother.'
+			'You spend several minutes fantasizing about your entry into parenthood before you remember you have places you need to be. You finally get up, still giddy as you go on with your day.'
 		end
 	act 'Finish' :menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
@@ -1378,16 +1378,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ArousedReact1':
 	pcs_pregtalk = 1
 	minut += 10
 	*nl
-	'You rub your thighs together as you stare at the pregnancy test in your hand. The two strips displayed confirm that you’ve been knocked up. You excitedly recount every load of cum blast into your fertile womb, wondering which one found purchase. You gently rub your clit in a circular motion as you think about the fact that, in a few months, everyone who sees your large, pregnant belly will know what a slut you are.'
+	'You rub your thighs together as you stare at the pregnancy test in your hand. The two strips displayed confirm that you’ve been knocked up. You excitedly recount every load of cum blasted into your fertile womb, wondering which one found purchase. You gently rub your clit in a circular motion as you think about the fact that, in a few months, everyone who sees your large, pregnant belly will know what a slut you are.'
 		if rape > 0 and stat['vaginal'] > 1 and incest['exp'] = 0:
-			'You pick up speed as you recall your rapist forcefully pumping you full of his wonderful semen without any concern for your desires. You loved having your agency stripped away as a complete stranger decided to make you a mother.'
+			'You pick up speed as you recall your rapist forcefully pumping you full of his wonderful semen without any concern for your desires. You loved having your dignity stripped away as a complete stranger decided to make you a mother.'
 		elseif incest['exp'] > 0:
 			'You pick up speed as you recall willingly allowing yourself to be pumped full of all of that wonderful semen. Knowing that you would get pregnant filled you with joy every time someone shot rope after rope of their baby batter into you.'
 			'The taboo knowledge that you could have gotten pregnant from incest turns you on even more.'
 		else
 			'You pick up speed as you recall willingly allowing yourself to be pumped full of all of that wonderful semen. Knowing that you would get pregnant filled you with joy every time someone shot rope after rope of their baby batter into you.'
 		end
-		'After several minutes of this you orgasm hard. You spend a moment panting before cleaning up and straightening your clothes. Once you''ve freshened up, you move on with your day, still aroused.'
+		'After several minutes of this, you orgasm hard. You spend a moment panting before cleaning up and straightening your clothes. Once you''ve freshened up, you move on with your day, still aroused.'
 	act 'Finish' :menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
 
@@ -1433,19 +1433,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'prvt_pee':
 			if rand_pee = 0:
 				'You take a seat on the toilet and begin peeing, glad to feel the pressure released.'
 			elseif rand_pee = 1:
-				'After sitting on the toilet you finally release your bladder. A shiver runs down your spine as the stream flows out of you. "Wow," you think, "I had to go more than I thought."'
+				'After sitting on the toilet you finally release your bladder. A shiver runs down your spine as the stream flows out of you. "Wow." you think, "I had to go more than I thought."'
 			elseif rand_pee = 2:
-				'Settling into the toilet seat you pull out your phone and begin checking for messages and doing other things to occupy the time until the stream slows to a trickle and finally stops.'
+				'Settling onto the toilet seat, you pull out your phone and begin checking for messages and doing other things to occupy the time until the stream slows to a trickle and finally stops.'
 			elseif rand_pee = 3:
-				'You plop down onto the porcelain throne and begin to unleash a torrent of urine into the bowl. As you wait for nature to finish it''s business you begin to daydream a bit as your mind wanders off.'
+				'You plop down onto the porcelain throne and begin to unleash a torrent of urine into the bowl. As you wait for nature to finish it''s business, you begin to daydream a bit as your mind wanders off.'
 			elseif rand_pee = 4:
-				'While relaxing your bladder and beginning to pee you decide to reflect on your recent interactions with the people in your life. "What do they think of me? Do they talk behind my back?" You continue contemplating until your body signals that the flow has ended.'
+				'While relaxing your bladder and beginning to pee, you decide to reflect on your recent interactions with the people in your life. "What do they think of me? Do they talk behind my back?" You continue contemplating until your body signals that the flow has ended.'
 			elseif rand_pee = 5:
-				'You nearly piss yourself as you rush to seat yourself onto the toilet. Unable to hold back the flood anymore, your body releases a seemingly endless stream as you moan quietly in relief, thankful that you made it in time.'
+				'You nearly piss yourself as you rush to seat yourself on the toilet. Unable to hold back the flood anymore, your body releases a seemingly endless stream as you moan quietly in relief, thankful that you made it in time.'
 			elseif rand_pee = 6:
 				'After situating yourself on the toilet, you relax and begin peeing. The urine tickles your labia as it sprays out of you into the toilet bowl.'
 			else
-				'As you begin to sit down you nearly jump back to your feet as the cold toilet seat stings your bare bottom. You shake your head and sigh before settling back onto the icy seat and doing your business.'
+				'As you begin to sit down, you nearly jump back to your feet as the cold toilet seat stings your bare bottom. You shake your head and sigh before settling back onto the icy seat and doing your business.'
 			end
 
 	!!If PC is on her period and using tampon, then the following options should appear as well as the standard "Finish and wipe" act:
@@ -1455,7 +1455,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'prvt_pee':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 2
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/pee/period/tampon/' + rand(1,12) + '.jpg"></center>'
-					'Reaching down and taking the string between your fingers, you slowly pull the used tampon from your vagina. You wrap it in toilet paper to be thrown in the trash bin. Opening your purse, you retrieve a fresh one before unpackaging it and carefully inserting it into you.'
+					'Reaching down and taking the string between your fingers, you slowly pull the used tampon from your vagina. You wrap it in toilet paper to be thrown in the trash bin. Opening your purse, you retrieve a fresh one, unpack it and carefully insert it into yourself.'
 
 					gs 'din_van', 'prvt_pee_end'
 				end
@@ -1484,7 +1484,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'prvt_pee_end':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/pee/wiping/' + rand(1,9) + '.jpg"></center>'
 		rand_pee = rand(0,2)
 		if rand_pee = 0:
-			'Gathering some toilet paper from the roll, you reach down wipe your vagina clean from the last drops of pee leaking from you before dropping the paper into the toilet.'
+			'Gathering some toilet paper from the roll, you reach down wipe your vagina clean from the last drops of urine leaking from you before dropping the paper into the toilet.'
 		elseif rand_pee = 1:
 			'Wrapping some toilet paper around your hand, you reach around and give your pussy and ass a quick wipe before letting the paper drop into the bowl.'
 		else
@@ -1507,7 +1507,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pblc_pee':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/pee/pee-public/' + rand(1,11) + '.jpg"></center>'
 			rand_pee = rand(0,7)
 			if rand_pee = 0:
-				'Settling into the toilet seat you pull out your phone and begin checking for messages and doing other things to occupy the time until the stream slows to a trickle and finally stops.'
+				'Settling onto the toilet seat, you pull out your phone and begin checking for messages and doing other things to occupy the time until the stream slows to a trickle and finally stops.'
 			elseif rand_pee = 1:
 				'While relaxing your bladder and beginning to pee you decide to reflect on your recent interactions with the people in your life. "What do they think of me? Do they talk behind my back?" You continue contemplating until your body signals that the flow has ended.'
 			elseif rand_pee = 2:
@@ -1524,7 +1524,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pblc_pee':
 				'As you sit down to relieve your bladder you get distracted reading some of the graffiti on the wall of the stall.'
 				$rand_girl = func('gschool_randperson', 1, '', 1, 1, 1, 1, 1, 0)
 				if rand_pee = 0:
-					'Albina and her Starlettes are a bunch of dirty whores.'
+					'Albina and her Starlets are a bunch of dirty whores!'
 				elseif rand_pee = 1:
 					'<<$rand_girl>>''s vagina smells like puke!'
 				elseif rand_pee = 2:
@@ -1542,7 +1542,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pblc_pee':
 				elseif rand_pee = 8:
 					'Tampons vs. Pads, cast your vote! Below this text are hash marks indicating various girl''s preference. One person also wrote "Freebleeder for life!" Ewww.'
 				elseif rand_pee = 9:
-					'Petra''s cock is smaller than my lipstick tube, LOL!'
+					'Petka''s cock is smaller than my lipstick tube, LOL!'
 				elseif rand_pee = 10:
 					'You''re beautiful! Believe that!'
 				elseif rand_pee = 11:
@@ -1575,7 +1575,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pblc_pee':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 2
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/pee/period/tampon/' + rand(1,12) + '.jpg"></center>'
-					'Reaching down and taking the string between your fingers, you slowly pull the used tampon from your vagina. You wrap it in toilet paper to be thrown in the trash bin. Opening your purse, you retrieve a fresh one before unpackaging it and carefully inserting it into you.'
+					'Reaching down and taking the string between your fingers, you slowly pull the used tampon from your vagina. You wrap it in toilet paper to be thrown in the trash bin. Opening your purse, you retrieve a fresh one before unpackaging it and carefully inserting it into yourself.'
 
 					gs 'din_van', 'pblc_pee_end'
 				end
@@ -1604,7 +1604,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pblc_pee_end':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/pee/wiping/' + rand(1,9) + '.jpg"></center>'
 		rand_pee = rand(0,6)
 		if rand_pee = 0:
-			'Gathering some toilet paper from the roll, you reach down wipe your vagina clean from the last drops of pee leaking from you before dropping the paper into the toilet.'
+			'Gathering some toilet paper from the roll, you reach down wipe your vagina clean from the last drops of urine leaking from you before dropping the paper into the toilet.'
 		elseif rand_pee = 1:
 			'Wrapping some toilet paper around your hand, you reach around and give your pussy and ass a quick wipe before letting the paper drop into the bowl.'
 		elseif rand_pee = 2:
@@ -1612,11 +1612,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pblc_pee_end':
 		elseif rand_pee = 3:
 			'You gather some of the rough, cheap toilet paper and use it to lightly wipe yourself, not wanting to irritate your sensitive skin. You drop it into the dirty toilet and use your foot to push the handle in order to flush.'
 		elseif rand_pee = 4:
-			'Looking over for the roll of toilet paper see that the roll has been used up. Noticing that the stall next to you seems occupied, you politely ask the stranger to help you out. The stranger chuckles a bit before kindly handing you a wad under the stall wall, which you happily use.'
+			'Looking for the roll of toilet paper, you are dismayed to see that the roll has been used up. Noticing that the stall next to you seems occupied, you politely ask the stranger to help you out. The stranger chuckles a bit before kindly handing you a wad under the stall wall, which you happily use.'
 		else
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/pee/wiping/no' + rand(1,6) + '.jpg"></center>'
-			'Reaching out for toilet paper you sigh as you notice that the roll is empty. Annoyed, you wiggle your ass to shake the last few drops from your lady bits before pulling up your panties and walking out of the stall.'
+			'Reaching out for toilet paper, you sigh as you notice that the roll is empty. Annoyed, you wiggle your ass to shake the last few drops off before pulling up your panties and walking out of the stall.'
 		end
 
 		act 'Finish':menu_off = 0 & gt $loc, $loc_arg