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  1. 152 144
      locations/anushaptbr.qsrc
  2. 69 72
      locations/dreams.qsrc

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locations/anushaptbr.qsrc

@@ -10,25 +10,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anushka''s brother''s room</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'The room is disorganized and untidy. It is fairly messy with a lot of clothes scattered about in various piles. Two beds are crammed against opposite walls, leaving an open space in the center. There is a small TV on a stand in the room with a PlayStation console lying partially hidden under some clothes in front of it.'
+	'The room is disorganized and untidy. It''s fairly messy with a lot of clothes scattered about in various piles. Two beds are crammed against opposite walls, leaving an open space in the center. There is a small TV on a stand in the room with a PlayStation console lying partially hidden under some clothes in front of it.'
 	
-	act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
+	act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 	
 	if AnushkaLoc = 3 and maksimQW['QWstage'] = 0:
 		maksimQW['QWstage'] = 1
 		menu_off = 1
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
-		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing and look towards you in fear and anger. Maksim, the older brother is maybe 13 or 14, the age when boys start paying attention to girls. Timofey, the younger brother, is about a year or two younger.'
+		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing and look towards you in fear and anger. Maksim, the older brother, is 13 or 14, the age when boys start paying attention to girls. Timofey is about a year or two younger.'
 		'Maksim gathers some courage before speaking. "What do you want? Get out of our room!"'
 		*nl
-		'"Calm down. I just wanted to see what you were up to because I know you little shitheads are always up to something." Anushka quickly replies.'
-		'"What do you care what we do? Shouldn''t you be off with your band or sucking some cock?"'
-		'Anushka reaches out and slaps him on the back of the head. "Watch what you say, or I''ll beat your little ass."'
+		'"Calm down. I just wanted to see what you were up to because I know you little shitheads are always up to something!" Anushka quickly replies.'
+		'"Why do you care what we do? Shouldn''t you be off with your band or sucking some cock?"'
+		'Anushka reaches out and slaps him on the back of the head. "Watch what you say, or I''ll beat your little ass!"'
 		*nl
 		'He rubs the back of his head. "That''s what mother always says."'
-		'Anushka fumes a bit. "Fuck that bitch and don''t listen to her. You better listen to dad, you little asshole."'
-		'He just rolls his eyes and ignores her. Looking at you now, he says "Don''t tell me... is this one of the famous groupies that we''ve heard so many stories about?"'
+		'Anushka fumes. "Fuck that bitch and don''t listen to her. You better listen to dad, you little asshole!"'
+		'He just rolls his eyes and ignores her. "Don''t tell me... Is this one of the famous groupies that we''ve heard so many stories about?" he asks while looking at you.'
 		act 'Excuse me?':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
@@ -36,8 +36,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anushka''s brother''s room</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 			'"What do you mean?" you ask.'
-			'"We hear a lot of great stories about the band and its groupies from Radomir." Maksim answers.'
-			'"Don''t listen to what he says. He''s just making up most of that stuff to impress you." snaps an irritated Anushka.'
+			'"We hear a lot of great stories about the band and its groupies from Radomir," he answers.'
+			'"Don''t listen to him! He''s just making most of that stuff up to impress you!" Anushka snaps.'
 			'"Well, at least we can hope this groupie is better than Alyona."'
 			act 'Why''s that?':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -45,20 +45,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anushka''s brother''s room</font></b></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Well, she''s really mean to us. She always beats me up and won''t play games with us." Maksim says as he looks at you sadly. Timofey nods in agreement.'
-				'"If you would stop trying to film her while she is taking a shower, maybe she wouldn''t be kicking your ass, you little pervert!" Anushka interjects.'
-				'"Your brothers are really something else. I guess even boys at this age think with their smaller head." you say.'
+				'"She''s really mean to us! She always beats me up and won''t play games with us," Maksim says as he looks at you sadly. Timofey nods in agreement.'
+				'"If you stop trying to film her while she''s taking a shower, maybe she wouldn''t be kicking your ass, you little pervert!" Anushka interjects.'
+				'"Your brothers are really something else. I guess even boys at this age think with their smaller head," you reply.'
 				*nl
-				'Anushka nods in agreement. "Yeah, most of them are slaves to their lust, even if they are too young to even understand it yet."'
+				'Anushka nods in agreement. "Yeah, most of them are slaves to their lust, even if they''re too young to even understand it yet."'
 				'Maksim puffs up. "I''m not too young!"'
 				'Anushka laughs at him and turns to you. "Maybe I should tell my dad what they''re up to?"'
 				act 'Laugh':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-					'The brothers are looking at the two of you in total fear as Anushka continues. "Look at them! They''re scared shitless."'
+					'The brothers are looking at the two of you in total fear as Anushka continues. "Look at them! They''re scared shitless!"'
 					'Maksim is fuming with anger and starts yelling. "Get out of our room!"'
-					'When you and Anushka just keep on laughing, he and Timofey get up and push you out the door.'
-					act 'Leave':AnushkaLoc=2&gt'anushapt','hallway'
+					'When you and Anushka just keep laughing, he and Timofey get up and push you out the door.'
+					act 'Leave': AnushkaLoc = 2 & gt 'anushapt','hallway'
 				end
 			end
 		end
@@ -67,14 +67,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 		menu_off = 1
 		minut += 3
 		gs 'stat'
-		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room and they immediately stop doing what they were doing. Maksim gathers some courage. "What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie with you again."'
-		'"Calm down. I just wanted to see if you were up for a match." Anushka quickly replies, pointing to the gaming console in their room.'
-		'Maksim glances at his brother for a moment, then back to Anushka. "All of us?"'
+		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room and they immediately stop doing what they were doing as Maksim gathers some courage. "What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your breasts. "I see you brought your groupie with you again."'
+		'"Calm down. I just wanted to see if you were up for a match?" Anushka quickly replies, pointing to the gaming console in their room.'
+		'Maksim glances at his brother for a moment, then back at Anushka. "All of us?"'
 		*nl
 		'She nods. "That''s the plan. The two of us against the two of you."'
-		'Both of them get excited at that. "Your friend better be great. We''ve been practicing really hard, and we''ll definitely beat you this time!"'
-		'Anushka quickly replies while smiling. "You really think you can beat me this time? You got your asses handed to you the last time."'
-		'The boys nod at each other. "This time will be different. We''re sure we will win."'
+		'Both of them get excited. "Your friend better be great. We''ve been practicing really hard, and we''ll definitely beat you this time!"'
+		'"You really think you can beat me this time? You got your asses handed to you the last time!" Anushka quickly replies while smiling.'
+		'The boys nod at each other. "This time will be different. We''re sure we''ll win!"'
 		act 'What''s this all about?':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 2
@@ -89,8 +89,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/playgamebro.jpg"></center>'
 				'The brothers turn away from you and start whispering amongst themselves. They must be planning something.'
-				'"Let''s play!" Timofey says smiling.'
-				'The four of you play for several minutes. You really don''t know what''s happening, because it is some shooter game you have never played before. However, Anushka does her best to explain as you play.'
+				'"Let''s play!" Timofey says with a smile.'
+				'The four of you play for several minutes. You really don''t know what''s happening because it''s some shooter game you''ve never played before. However, Anushka does her best to explain as you play.'
 				act 'Finish':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 15
@@ -99,38 +99,40 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 					if pcs_gaming <= 20:
 						'The game is pretty much over. Both of them are better players than you are. Anushka does what she can, but the brothers easily manage to win back to back matches. Both brothers jump up and do some weird little victory dance. "Haha, we win and you lose!" Maksim taunts.'
 						'Anushka rolls her eyes at their antics. "You just got lucky is all."'
-						'"You suck, you suck!" Maksim chants, and Timofey quickly joins in. "Losers, losers!"'
+						'"You suck, you suck!" Maksim chants and Timofey quickly joins in. "Losers, losers!"'
 						'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on, let''s go. They''re not going to stop acting like jackasses anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
 					elseif pcs_gaming <= 40:
-						'You start to get a handle on things, and for a while, the game is pretty much a draw with no team getting the upper hand. All of a sudden however, you make a mistake, and the brothers are about to win. Just as they''re about to grab their victory though, Anushka uses her foot to push Maksim off the bed. This allows her to secure the win while he is trying to recover.'
-						'He begins to yell. "Not fair... you cheated! You always do this when you''re about to lose." The younger one joins in, "Anushka''s a cheater."'
-						'"Don''t be such a crybaby. I thought you said you were prepared this time?" she says, teasing them with a smile on her face.'
+						'You start to get a handle on things, and for a while, the game is pretty much a draw with no team getting the upper hand. All of a sudden however, you make a mistake, and the brothers are about to win. Just as they''re about to grab their victory though, Anushka uses her foot to push Maksim off the bed. This allows her to secure the win while he''s trying to recover.'
+						'He immediately starts yelling. "You cheated! You always do this when you''re about to lose!"'
+						'"Yeah, Anushka''s a cheater!" Timofey chimes in.'
+						'"Don''t be such a crybaby! I thought you said you were prepared this time?" she says, teasing them with a smile on her face.'
 						*nl
-						'The comment only makes the situation worse, and things escalate. The brothers are now yelling at Anushka and obviously taking it way too seriously. After a bit, Anushka gets fed up with them and starts yelling back.'
-						'All of a sudden, the door opens and their dad, Eduard, is standing there. He bellows at everyone to "Knock it off!" Anushka and the boys shut up at once. They obviously know better than to test their dad.'
+						'The comment only makes the situation worse, and things escalate. The brothers are now yelling at Anushka and taking it way too seriously. After a while, Anushka gets fed up with them and starts yelling back.'
+						'The door suddenly opens and their dad, Eduard, is standing there. "Knock it off!" he bellows and Anushka and the boys go silent at once.'
 						'"But dad! She cheated again!" Timofey pleads with him.'
 						'"But dad nothing. Weren''t you supposed to be studying?" Eduard asks.'
 						*nl
-						'"Y-Yes..." both brothers answer. "Well get to it!" he says to them, then turns to you and Anushka. "You two get out of their room. Nush stop tormenting your brothers." he says. He holds the door open until you both leave, then pulls it shut hard.'
-						'Anushka starts to respond. "I wasn''t..." but her dad interrupts her. "I don''t care. You leave them alone so they can study. Take your friend to your room." With that, he turns and goes back to the living room.'
+						'"Y-Yes..." both brothers answer.' 
+						'"Well get to it!" he says to them, then turns to you and Anushka. "You two get out of their room. And stop tormenting your brothers, Nush!" He holds the door open until you both leave, then pulls it shut hard.'
+						'Anushka starts to respond, but Eduard interrupts her. "I don''t care! Leave them alone so they can study. Take your friend to your room." With that, he turns and goes back to the living room.'
 					else
 						'While it''s your first time playing, you manage to hold your own, and with Anushka''s skill, it becomes clear you two have the upper hand. The brothers keep it close, but they fall a little short in both matches.'
 						'Maksim throws down his controller and turns on Timofey. "Why are you so bad? We could have beat them if you didn''t suck so much!"'
-						'Timofey tries to defend himself. "It''s not my fault Nush and <<$pcs_nickname>> is just too good."'
-						'Before Maksim can respond, Anushka cuts him off. "It''s not Timo''s fault. I killed you three times when you kept trying to go through that courtyard. You''re just mad because you got beat by a girl... again." she says teasingly and sticks her tongue out at him.'
+						'Timofey tries to defend himself. "It''s not my fault Nush and <<$pcs_nickname>> are too good!"'
+						'Before Maksim can respond, Anushka cuts him off. "It''s not Timo''s fault. I killed you three times when you kept trying to go through that courtyard. You''re just mad because you got beat by a girl... Again," she says teasingly and sticks her tongue out at him.'
 						'Maksim''s eyes flare at Anushka. "GO SUCK A DICK! THAT''S ALL <i>YOU''RE</i> GOOD AT, SLUT!" he screams at her.'
 						*nl
-						'Anushka''s eyes narrow. "Watch your mouth you little shit. It''s just a game."'
-						'Before anyone can say more, the door suddenly opens and their dad, Eduard, is standing there. "Knock it off!" he bellows, and in response, everyone shuts up.'
+						'Anushka''s eyes narrow. "Watch your mouth, you little shit! It''s just a game!"'
+						'Before anyone can say anymore, the door suddenly opens and their dad, Eduard, is standing there. "Knock it off!" he bellows, and in response, everyone shuts up.'
 						'He looks at Maksim. "Did I just hear you call your sister a slut and tell her to suck a dick?" His voice is low and full of anger. Maksim visibly shrinks under his dad''s gaze.'
-						'"She was teasing me." he whines weakly, trying to defend himself as he knows he is obviously in trouble.'
+						'"She was teasing me..." he whines weakly, trying to defend himself.'
 						*nl
-						'Eduard turns and glares at Anushka. "Stop teasing your brothers and go to your room." When she starts to open her mouth, he cuts her off. "I don''t want to hear it. Go to your room." With that, she gets up in a huff and does as she''s told. You follow behind her.'
-						'As you leave, you hear Ed say to Maksim. "What have I told you about calling your sister a slut?"'
-						'Maksim''s voices cracks. "I''m sorry."'
+						'Eduard turns and glares at Anushka. "Stop teasing your brothers and go to your room." When she starts to open her mouth, he cuts her off. "I don''t want to hear it. Go to your room!" With that, she gets up in a huff and does as she''s told. You follow behind her.'
+						'"What have I told you about calling your sister a slut?" you hear Eduard ask as you leave.'
+						'Maksim''s voices cracks. "I''m sorry..."'
 						'The door closes before you can hear any more, leaving you unable to make out anything beyond muffled sounds.'
 					end
-					act 'Go to Anushka''s room':AnushkaLoc=2&gt'anush_bedroom','anushroom'
+					act 'Go to Anushka''s room': AnushkaLoc = 2 & gt 'anush_bedroom','anushroom'
 				end	
 			end
 		end
@@ -141,14 +143,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 			if maksimQW['QWstage'] = 3: maksimQW['QWstage'] = 4
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see the boys sitting there talking about something. Maksim is maybe 13 or 14, the age when boys start paying attention to girls. Timofey is about a year or two younger.'
+			'You open the door and look into the brothers'' room. You see the boys sitting talking about something. Maksim is 13 or 14, the age when boys start paying attention to girls. Timofey is about a year or two younger.'
 			act 'What are you up to?':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/brothers.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Nothing much really. We were just discussing what kind of band we were going to have when we get older." Maksim responds.'
-				'"Oh? So you want to be like your big sister and be in a band too?" you ask them.'
+				'"Nothing much really. We were just discussing what kind of band we were going to have when we''re older," Maksim responds.'
+				'"Oh? So you want to be like your big sister and be in a band too?" you ask.'
 				'Maksim shakes his head. "I don''t want to be like her, but I do want to be like Radomir. I want to be the band leader and get all the bitches for free. He''s the best."'
 				'Before you can respond, Timofey cuts in. "Arkadi is the best! Or maybe Valentin because they give us stuff."'
 				act 'What does Valentin give you?':
@@ -156,17 +158,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 					minut += 2
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-					'"He''s pretty cool, and he gives us his old video games sometimes. He also has a bike like dad and spends a lot of time with him." Timofey answers.'
+					'"He''s pretty cool. He gives us his old video games sometimes. He also has a bike like dad and spends a lot of time with him," Timofey answers.'
 					'"Does he ever let you sit on his bike?" you ask.'
-					'"Yeah, he lets us ride with him sometimes. It''s so awesome!" says Timofey.'
-					'"However at the same time, he doesn''t let us drink..." Maksim replies.'
+					'"Yeah, he lets us ride with him sometimes. It''s so awesome!" Timofey smiles.'
+					'"He doesn''t let us drink though..." Maksim moans.'
 					act 'Who lets you drink?':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 2
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Arkadi!" they both shout. "Just don''t tell our dad because he will get mad."'
-						'"Don''t worry. I won''t tell your dad." you reassure them.'
+						'"Arkadi!" they both shout. "Just don''t tell our dad because he''ll get mad."'
+						'"Don''t worry. I won''t tell your dad," you reassure them.'
 						act 'What about Radomir?':
 							*clr & cla
 							minut += 2
@@ -174,11 +176,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 							'"He''s pretty cool. I want to be like him when I grow up!" Maksim confidently says.'
 							'"Because he''s a good musician?" you ask.'
-							'"No, because he''s a pussy magnet! He can get any girl he wants!" Maksim answers while giving you his best seductive grin. It''s laughable at best.'
+							'"No, because he''s a pussy magnet! He can get any girl he wants!" he says while giving you his best seductive grin. It''s laughable at best.'
 							*nl
 							'"That was way too much information for me. I think it''s time for me to head out. I''m feeling a bit nauseous." You see a disappointed look on Maksim''s face.'
-							'As you are walking out, Maksim turns to his brother, and you hear him say "Bitches are a ruble a dozen, just like Radomir said." As you close the door, you hear Timofey agreeing. It''s very likely that he has no idea to what he is agreeing to.'
-							act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
+							'As you''re walking out, Maksim turns to his brother. "Bitches are a ruble a dozen, just like Radomir said!"' 
+							'As you close the door, you hear Timofey agreeing. It''s very likely that he has no idea what he''s agreeing with, though.'
+							act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 						end
 					end	
 				end
@@ -186,14 +189,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 		elseif brotherroom = 2 and maksimQW['QWstage'] >= 4:
 			gs 'stat'
 			if maksimQW['QWstage'] = 4: maksimQW['QWstage'] = 5
-			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see the two brothers fighting on Maksim''s bed. They immediately stop when they see you.'
+			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see them fighting on Maksim''s bed. They immediately stop when they see you.'
 			act 'What are you doing?':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/browrestle.jpg"></center>'
-				'"What are you boys up to?" you ask them.'
-				'Maksim blushes. "N-Nothing... g-get out of our room."'
+				'"What are you boys up to?" you ask.'
+				'Maksim blushes. "N-Nothing... G-get out of our room!"'
 				'You walk over to his bed and find a porn magazine lying on it.'
 				'Timofey starts teasing him. "Haha, you got caught by one of Anushka''s friends looking at the magazine!"'
 				'"Shut up! You''re just a little kid, so what do you know?!"'
@@ -203,19 +206,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 					'You walk up to them and grab the magazine. Maksim tries his hardest to stop you, but you easily manage to push him away.'
-					'"Give that back! It''s mine!" Maksim says dejected. "It''s all your fault!" he says as he turns to his brother. "If you could only keep your mouth shut. I can''t wait to get my own room."'
+					'"Give that back! It''s mine!" he says dejected. "It''s all your fault!" he says as he turns to his brother. "If you could only keep your mouth shut. I can''t wait to get my own room."'
 					'Timofey just keeps on sneering at his brother.'
 					act 'Calm down':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 2
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-						'"It doesn''t have to be all bad." you say. "I share a room with my sister."'
-						'"Wow, two girls in one room? That is so hot." says Maksim. "Our sister is the only one with her own room. That''s so unfair."'
+						'"It doesn''t have to be all bad," you say. "I share a room with my sister."'
+						'"Wow, two girls in one room? That''s so hot!" Maksim says. "Our sister is the only one with her own room. That''s so unfair!"'
 						'"She is a girl after all. Wouldn''t it be awkward if she shared a room with you?" you try to explain.'
-						'"I guess... but she could sleep in the living room, then we could each have our own room." he says, as if that would be totally fair.'
+						'"I guess, but she could sleep in the living room, then we could each have our own room!" he says, as if that would be totally fair.'
 						'Giving up on reasoning with him, you shrug and turn to the magazine. As you flip through the pages, you realize the boy has some kinky tastes and wonder who might have bought something like this for him. Whoever it was, you figure there''s no harm in him looking at pictures, so when you reach the end, you throw the magazine back onto his bed. "I won''t tell anyone your secret, but try to be nice to each other at least."'
-						act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
+						act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 					end
 				end	
 			end
@@ -228,29 +231,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 				minut += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksim.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Where''s your brother?" you ask him.'
-				'Maksim gives you an annoyed look. "Why do you care? He is likely outside playing in the dirt like a stupid kid."'
+				'"Where''s your brother?" you ask.'
+				'Maksim gives you an annoyed look. "Why do you care? He''s probably outside playing in the dirt like a stupid kid."'
 				'You smile. "Why aren''t you playing with him?"'
-				'"I''m not a little kid anymore. I''m practically a grown man." he tells you.'
-				act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
+				'"I''m not a little kid anymore. I''m practically a grown man!" he tells you.'
+				act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 				act 'Ask if he wants to play':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 3
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-					'You nod while trying not to laugh. "Oh I see, so do you want to play a game with me then?"'
-					'It looks like he is about to say no, but then he smiles. "Ok, but only if we make it interesting."'
-					'"Interesting how?" you ask him.'
-					'He grins. "If I win, you have to show me your boobs, but if you win, I will tell you a secret about Nush that you don''t know."'
-					act 'No, I don''t think so':
+					'You nod while trying not to laugh. "Oh I see. Do you want to play a game with me then?"'
+					'It looks like he''s about to say no, but then he smiles. "Okay, but only if we make it interesting."'
+					'"Interesting how?" you ask.'
+					'He grins. "If I win, you have to show me your boobs, but if you win, I''ll tell you a secret about Nush that you don''t know."'
+					act 'I don''t think so':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 3
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-						'You shake your head. "No, I don''t think so." you tell him.'
-						'He frowns. "Fine then get out of my room. Just get out!"'
-						'You back out of the doorway. "Ok... ok, I''m going."'
-						act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
+						'You shake your head. "No, I don''t think so..." you tell him.'
+						'He frowns. "Fine then! Get out of my room. Just get out!"'
+						'You back out of the doorway. "Okay... Okay, I''m going."'
+						act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 					end	
 					act 'Deal':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -259,7 +262,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksimplay.jpg"></center>'
 						if pcs_gaming <= 40:
-							'The two of you start playing, and it quickly becomes obvious he has played this game a lot and is very good at it. You try, but you are just unable to keep up with him. A couple of times you come close to matching him. However, oftentimes you are just outmatched. After a couple of matches, he pauses the game and looks at you with a lustful grin. "Haha you lost! Now show me your boobs."'
+							'The two of you start playing, and it quickly becomes obvious he''s played this game a lot and is very good at it. You try, but you''re unable to keep up with him. You come close a few times, but you''re mostly hopelessly outmatched. After a few matches, he pauses the game and looks at you with a lustful grin. "Haha you lost! Now show me your boobs."'
 							gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
 							if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:	
 								act 'Refuse (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -268,11 +271,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 									'You shake your head. "No, I don''t think so. You''re too young anyways."'
-									'His eyes flash because he is obviously furious with you. "You promised!"'
+									'His eyes flash in fury. "You promised!"'
 									'You shrug. "I lied."'
-									'"GET OUT! Get out of my room!" he yells at you.'
-									'Not wanting anyone to come and find out what is going on, you quickly get up and leave.'
-									act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
+									'"GET OUT! Get out of my room!" he yells.'
+									'Not wanting anyone to come and find out what''s going on, you quickly get up and leave.'
+									act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 								end
 							else
 								act 'Refuse (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
@@ -282,36 +285,39 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 								gs 'flash', 'tits', 'indoors', 1, 1
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksimshow.jpg"></center>'
-								'Well, you did agree, and he did win. You stand and pull your top up to expose your breasts to him. His eyes grow wide as he stares at your tits. Before either of you can say anything, you hear the front door slam. "Maksim... Maksim... come see... come see." Timofey yells as he runs down the hall.'
-								*nl
-								'You pull your top back into place just before he bursts into the room. Maksim gives him a dirty look. "Why do you always have to ruin everything?"'
-								'Timofey stops, obviously not understanding what is going on. He looks between the two of you completely confused. "I just wanted to show you something." You use this as an opportunity to slip out of the room and close the door behind you, leaving the two of them behind to argue.'
-								act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
+								'"A bet''s a bet," you shrug.'
+								'You stand and pull your top up, his eyes growing wide as he stares at your breasts. Before either of you can say anything, you hear the front door slam. "Maksim... Maksim... Come see... Come see!" Timofey yells as he runs down the hall.'
+								'You pull your top back into place just before he bursts into the room and Maksim gives him a dirty look. "Why do you always have to ruin everything?!"'
+								'Timofey stops, obviously not understanding what''s going on. He looks between the two of you completely confused. "I just wanted to show you something..." You use this as an opportunity to slip out of the room and close the door behind you, leaving the two of them behind to argue.'
+								act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 							end
 						else
-							'You play a game with him. He is pretty good, but not good enough to beat you. After a bit, he seems to get annoyed by the fact he keeps losing. "I''m bored with this game!" he declares, turning it off in the middle of your last game, and pulling out a single player one.'
+							'You play a game with him. He''s pretty good, but not good enough to beat you. After a while, he grows frustrated. "I''m bored with this game!" he declares, turning it off in the middle of your last game and pulling out a single player one.'
 							'You smile, knowing he only switched games because he couldn''t win. "Well?"'
 							'He glances at you. "Well what?"'
-							'You smile to him. "You said you would tell me a secret about your sister, so what is it?"'
+							'You smile at him. "You said you would tell me a secret about your sister, so what is it?"'
 							if maksimQW['secret1'] = 0 and hotcat >= 6 and npc_rel['A144'] >= 50:
 								maksimQW['secret1'] = 1
-								'He makes a V with his fingers and put it to his mouth sticking his tongue between them in a universal sign of eating pussy, mimicking licking for a few seconds. "She [i]likes[/i] you." You just shake your head, you should have known he wouldn''t actually tell you anything you didn''t already know.'
+								'He makes a ''V'' shape with his fingers and puts it against his mouth before sticking his tongue between them in the universal sign for eating pussy, mimicking licking for a few seconds. "She <i>likes</i> you."' 
+								'You just shake your head. You should have known he wouldn''t actually tell you anything you didn''t already know.'
 							elseif maksimQW['secret2'] = 0:
 								maksimQW['secret2'] = 1
-								'He looks around and then to you. "She keeps a bunch of drugs in her dresser."'
-								'You smile a bit at that. "How would you know that? You been going through her panty drawer?" You ask him in a teasing tone.'
-								'He turns bright red for a moment. "NO!" Then looks like he gets mad. "Shut up and get out of my room!" You sigh and get up leaving his room, before he throws a fit.'
+								'He looks around for a few seconds. "She keeps a bunch of drugs in her dresser."'
+								'You smile. "How would you know that? Have you been going through her panty drawer?" you ask in a teasing tone.'
+								'He turns bright red. "NO! Shut up and get out of my room!"' 
+								'You sigh and get up, leaving his room before he throws a fit.'
 							else
-								'He sighs and tells you about some little nonsense she did as a kid that no one would care about, once again you learn nothing worth knowing. You don''t know why you keep playing him. He never tells you anything interesting, you shake your head and leave.'
+								'He sighs and tells you about some nonsense thing she did as a kid that no one would care about, once again learning nothing worth knowing. You don''t know why you keep playing against him. You just shake your head and leave.'
 							end
-							act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
+							act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 						end
 					end
 				end	
 			end
 		else
-			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see Maksim and Timofey are here. They do whatever it is that boys do. Maksim stares at your tits for a couple of minutes before saying "Get lost."'
-			'Timofey looks over and adds, "Yeah, get lost. No girls allowed!" After that, they just ignore you.'
+			'You open the door and look into the brothers'' room. You see Maksim and Timofey are here, doing whatever it is that boys do. Maksim stares at your breasts for a few seconds before telling you to get lost.'
+			'Timofey looks over at you. "Yeah, get lost. No girls allowed!"'
+			'After that, they just ignore you.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 		end
 		killvar 'brotherroom'
@@ -329,13 +335,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rematch':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anushka''s brother''s room</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 	if rand(1,2) = 1:
-		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room and they immediately stop doing whatever they were doing. Maksim gathers some courage. "What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie with you again."'
-		'"I just wanted to see if you were up for a rematch." Anushka replies, pointing to the gaming console in their room.'
-		'Maksim glances at his brother for a moment, then back to Anushka. "Ok... fine."'
+		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room and they immediately stop doing whatever they were doing. Maksim gathers some courage. "What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your breasts. "I see you brought your groupie with you again."'
+		'"I just wanted to see if you were up for a rematch?" Anushka replies, pointing to the gaming console in their room.'
+		'Maksim glances at his brother for a moment, then back at Anushka. "Okay, fine."'
 		*nl
-		'Both of them get excited at that. "Your friend better be great. We''ve been practicing really hard and we''ll definitely beat you this time."'
+		'Both of them get excited. "Your friend better be great. We''ve been practicing really hard and we''ll definitely beat you this time!"'
 		'Anushka quickly questions him while smiling. "You really think you can beat me this time?"'
-		'The boys nod at each other. "We''re sure we will win."'
+		'The boys nod at each other. "We''re sure!"'
 		act 'Sit down and play':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
@@ -343,7 +349,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rematch':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/playgamebro.jpg"></center>'
 			'The brothers turn away from you and start whispering. You''re sure that they must be planning something.'
-			'"Let''s play." Timofey says smiling.'
+			'"Let''s play!" Timofey says smiling.'
 			'The four of you play for several minutes. It''s the same shooter game as last time, and you''re a little bit better than before.'
 			act 'Finish':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -352,60 +358,61 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rematch':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/playgamebro.jpg"></center>'
 				if pcs_gaming <= 20:
 					'The game is pretty much over and both of them are still better players than you are. Anushka does what she can again, but the brothers easily manage to win back to back matches. Both brothers jump up and do some weird little victory dance. "Haha, we win and you lose!" Maksim taunts.'
-					'Anushka rolls her eyes at their antics. "Yeah, yeah. You won." She reaches over and ruffles Timofey''s hair, which he tries and fails to dodge. "Good job kiddo."'
-					'"Pfft I won it. Timo almost caused us to lose, but I carried his sorry ass!" Maksim says.'
+					'Anushka rolls her eyes at their antics. "Yeah, yeah. You won." She reaches over and ruffles Timofey''s hair, which he tries and fails to dodge. "Good job, kiddo."'
+					'"Pfft, I won it! Timo almost caused us to lose, but I carried his sorry ass!" Maksim says.'
 					'Timofey pulls away from his sister. "Nuh-uh, I almost scored as good you as you did!" This quickly turns into them arguing over who did better.'
 					'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on, let''s go. They''re not going to stop acting like brats anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
 				elseif pcs_gaming <= 40:
-					'The game is pretty much a draw with no one getting the upper hand until Anushka starts to cheat again. She starts jabbing Maksim with her foot and covers up Timofey''s eyes with her hand at a critical moment. The brothers try to return the favor, and soon the three of them are more interested in wrestling and fighting than actually winning the game. With everyone else distracted, you take advantage and win the match.'
-					'Realizing what happened, Maksim begins to yell. "Not fair! You cheated again!"'
-					'"You were doing the same to me, so you were cheating too." she says, teasing them with a smile on her face.'
+					'The game is pretty much a draw with no one getting the upper hand until Anushka starts to cheat again. She starts jabbing Maksim with her foot and covers Timofey''s eyes with her hand at a critical moment. The brothers try to return the favor, and soon the three of them are more interested in wrestling and fighting than actually winning the game. With everyone else distracted, you take advantage and win the match.'
+					'Realizing what happened, Maksim starts yelling. "Not fair! You cheated again!"'
+					'"You were doing the same to me, so you were cheating too!" Anushka replies, teasing them with a smile on her face.'
 					*nl
-					'Maksim obviously doesn''t see it that way. "You started it, and your groupie took advantage of the situation."'
-					'Anushka just laughs. "Well who''s fault is that? If you weren''t so consumed with trying to get back at me, you would have noticed what she was doing and maybe won."'
-					'Maksim responds by yelling "Shut up!"'
-					'Anushka interjects before he can say more. "Be quiet, do you want dad to come back in here again?"'
-					'That makes him shut his mouth and glance at the door, as if expecting their dad to burst in any moment. When the moment passes and he doesn''t, Maksim jumps on Anushka. "Cheater!" He is loud, but not too loud.'
+					'Maksim doesn''t see it that way. "You started it, and your groupie took advantage of the situation!"'
+					'Anushka just laughs. "Well whose fault is that? If you weren''t so consumed with trying to get back at me, you would have noticed what she was doing and maybe won."'
+					'"SHUT UP!" Maksim yells in response.'
+					'Anushka interjects before he can say more. "Be quiet! Do you want Dad to come in here again?"'
+					'He immediately goes quiet and glances at the door, as if expecting their dad to burst in any moment. When the moment passes, Maksim jumps on Anushka. "Cheater!" He''s loud, but not too loud.'
 					*nl
-					'Anushka and Maksim start to wrestle. She quickly starts to get the upper hand because he just isn''t big enough to beat his older sister yet. Once it becomes clear she is about to pin him down, Timofey jumps on her back and the three of them wrestle around. Anushka manages to pin one of them, but the other gets loose as she tries to pin them both. They come close a few times to pinning her down, but in the end, they all just give up, out of breath and lying in a heap.'
-					'Finally, Anushka gets up and untangles herself from them. "Come on, let''s go back to my room." she says to you. As you follow her out of the room, the brothers start to play another game, and Maksim says "Next time, we''ll win" just as Anushka closes the door on them.'
+					'Anushka and Maksim start to wrestle. She quickly starts to get the upper hand because he just isn''t big enough to beat his older sister yet. Once it becomes clear she''s about to pin him down, Timofey jumps on her back and the three of them wrestle around. Anushka manages to pin one of them, but the other gets loose as she tries to pin them both. They come close a few times to pinning her down, but in the end, they all just give up, out of breath and lying in a heap.'
+					'Finally, Anushka gets up and untangles herself from them. "Come on, let''s go back to my room," she says to you. As you follow her out of the room, the brothers start to play another game. "We''ll win next time!" you hear Maksim say as Anushka closes the door on them.'
 				else
 					'Before too long, it''s pretty clear you and Anushka have the upper hand. The brothers keep it close, but they fall a little short in both matches.'
 					'Maksim throws down his controller and turns on Timofey. "Why are you so bad? We could have beat them if you didn''t suck so much!"'
-					'Timofey tries to defend himself. "It''s not my fault that Nush and <<$pcs_nickname>> are just too good."'
-					'Before Maksim can respond, Anushka cuts him off. "It''s not Timo''s fault, and you know it. When you fall behind, you get too aggressive like always, which makes it easier for me to kill you. You''re just mad because you got beat by a girl... again." she says in a teasing tone, then sticks her tongue out at him.'
-					'Maksim''s eyes flare at Anushka and it looks like he''s about to scream at her again until she interjects. "Calm down, we don''t want dad in here again." With that, he shuts his mouth and glances at the door, then glares at Anushka.'
+					'Timofey tries to defend himself. "It''s not my fault that Nush and <<$pcs_nickname>> are just too good!"'
+					'Before Maksim can respond, Anushka cuts him off. "It''s not Timo''s fault, and you know it. When you fall behind, you get too aggressive like always, which makes it easier for me to kill you. You''re just mad because you got beat by a girl... Again," she says in a teasing tone, then sticks her tongue out at him.'
+					'Maksim''s eyes flare at Anushka and it looks like he''s about to scream at her again until she interjects. "Calm down, we don''t want Dad in here again." He shuts his mouth and glances at the door, then glares at Anushka.'
 					*nl
 					'"Get out! Get out of our room!" he says as he tries to shove her off the bed.'
-					'Anushka gets up. "Oh my God, you are such a baby. I don''t even know why I bother playing with you."'
-					'He pushes her towards the door after she gets up. "Good, then don''t... get out!"'
-					'Anushka sounds exasperated. "Fine then, you little brat."'
+					'Anushka gets up. "Oh my God, you''re such a baby! I don''t even know why I bother playing with you."'
+					'He pushes her towards the door. "Good, then don''t... Get out!"'
+					'Anushka sounds exasperated. "Fine then, you little brat!"'
 					*nl
 					'She turns towards you. "Come on, let''s go before this little shit starts to cry."'
-					'Maksim starts to yell "Fuck you bitch! Get out of our room!" but catches himself and lowers his voice partway through.'
+					'"Fuck you, bitch! Get out of our room!" he starts to yell, but catches himself and lowers his voice partway through.'
 					'Timofey runs up to his sister. "No, come back and play with us!" he pleads.'
-					'Instantly, Anushka eases up, and her anger seems to melt away. "Some other time squirt." she says to him with a smile and ruffles his hair, much to his annoyance.'
+					'Anushka instantly eases up, and her anger seems to melt away. "Some other time, squirt..." she says with a smile and ruffles his hair, much to his annoyance.'
 					'As she closes the door and leaves, you can hear Maksim berating his brother for being a pussy and pleading with their sister to play games with them.'
 				end
-				act 'Go to Anushka''s room':AnushkaLoc=2&gt'anush_bedroom','anushroom'
+				act 'Go to Anushka''s room': AnushkaLoc = 2 & gt 'anush_bedroom','anushroom'
 			end	
 		end
 	else
-		'The two of you walk down the hall and enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing. Maksim visibly gathers up his courage. "What is it? What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie along again."'
-		'"Calm down. I just wanted to see if you were up for a rematch." Anushka replies, pointing to the gaming console in their room.'
-		'Both of them get excited at that. "Yeah and this time we will beat you."'
-		'Anushka quickly replies while smiling. "You really think you can beat us this time?."'
-		'The boys nod at each other. "This time will be different. We''re sure we will win."'
+		'The two of you walk down the hall and enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing and Maksim visibly gathers up his courage. "What is it? What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your breasts. "I see you brought your groupie along again."'
+		'"Calm down. I just wanted to see if you were up for a rematch?" Anushka replies, pointing to the gaming console in their room.'
+		'Both of them get excited. "Yeah, and this time we will beat you!"'
+		'"You really think you can beat us this time?" Anushka quickly replies while smiling. '
+		'The boys nod at each other. "This time will be different. We''re sure we''ll win!"'
 		'Anushka laughs. "Nah, I don''t think so. Maybe you boys just like getting beat by girls?"'
-		'Maksim looks mad at that. "Just shut up and play!" Anushka just laughs again and mimics what he said in a mutter that taunts him.'
+		'Maksim looks mad. "Just shut up and play!"' 
+		'Anushka just laughs again and mimics what he said in a mutter that taunts him.'
 		act 'Play':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'exp_gain', 'gaming', rand(1,3)
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/playgamebro.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Come on guys, let''s just have fun." you tell them.'
-			'"We will win this time!" Maksim looks at the two of you determined.'
+			'"Come on guys, let''s just have fun!" you tell them.'
+			'"We''ll win this time!" Maksim says as he looks at the two of you, determined.'
 			'"Let''s play!" Timofey says smiling.'
 			'The four of you play for several minutes. You''ve gotten a lot better since the last time you played. You learned a lot and are able to help out more than you did before.'
 			act 'Finish':
@@ -415,33 +422,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rematch':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/playgamebro.jpg"></center>'
 				if pcs_gaming <= 20:
 					'It''s not enough however, as all of them are still better players than you. Anushka does what she can again, but the brothers easily manage to win back to back matches. Both brothers jump up and do some weird little victory dance. "Haha, we win and you lose!" Maksim taunts.'
-					'Anushka rolls her eyes at their antics. "Yeah, yeah. You won." She reaches over and ruffles Timofey''s hair, which he tries and fails to dodge. "Good job kiddo."'
-					'"Pfft, I won it. Timo almost caused us to lose, but I carried his sorry ass!" Maksim says.'
+					'Anushka rolls her eyes at their antics. "Yeah, yeah. You won." She reaches over and ruffles Timofey''s hair, which he tries and fails to dodge. "Good job, kiddo."'
+					'"Pfft, I won it! Timo almost caused us to lose, but I carried his sorry ass!" Maksim says.'
 					'Timofey pulls away from his sister. "Nuh-uh, I almost scored as good you as you did!" It quickly turns into them arguing over who did better.'
 					'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on, let''s go. They''re not going to stop acting like brats anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
 				elseif pcs_gaming <= 40:
-					'The two of you are slightly better than they are, and after some time, you come out on top. Maksim gets mad and throws his controller down. "Fuck!" He then turns on his brother. "It''s your fault we lost. God you''re so stupid."'
+					'The two of you are slightly better than they are, and after some time, you come out on top. Maksim gets mad and throws his controller down. "Fuck!" He then turns on his brother. "It''s your fault we lost! God, you''re so stupid!"'
 					'Timofey shakes his head. "No, you''re stupid and you''re why we lost. You always have to try and be the hero, so Nush tricks you every time."'
-					'Maksim suddenly leaps on top of his brother. "Shut your mouth you little shit! She doesn''t trick me!" he yells as he starts beating on him. Before you can even react, Anushka grabs Maksim by the back of his collar and yanks him off Timofey. "Leave him alone! He''s right. I baited you out then <<$pcs_nickname>> killed you. It''s not his fault."'
-					'Maksim gets back up and pushes Anushka. "Get out of my room. Get out or I''ll tell dad you''re picking on us again."'
-					'Anushka just shakes her head and goes for the door. "Come on <<$pcs_nickname>>, let''s get out of here." Just as you start to go out, Anushka stops and looks back in. "Maksim, you better leave him alone, or I''ll come back in here to beat your ass." Maksim rushes across the room and pushes the two of you the rest of the way out before slamming the door closed. Anushka angrily goes back to her room.'
+					'Maksim suddenly leaps on top of his brother. "Shut your mouth, you little shit! She doesn''t trick me!" he yells as he starts beating on him. Before you can even react, Anushka grabs Maksim by the back of his collar and yanks him off Timofey. "Leave him alone! He''s right. I baited you out then <<$pcs_nickname>> killed you. It''s not his fault."'
+					'Maksim gets back up and pushes Anushka. "Get out of my room. Get out or I''ll tell Dad you''re picking on us again!"'
+					'Anushka just shakes her head and goes for the door. "Come on <<$pcs_nickname>>, let''s get out of here." Just as you start to leave, Anushka stops and looks back in. "Maksim, you better leave him alone or I''ll come back in here and beat your ass."' 
+					'Maksim rushes across the room and pushes the two of you the rest of the way out before slamming the door closed. Anushka angrily goes back to her room.'
 				else
 					'Before too long, it''s pretty clear you and Anushka have the upper hand. The brothers keep it close, but they fall a little short in both matches.'
 					'Maksim throws down his controller. "Fuck!" He then turns on his brother. "Why are you so bad? We could have beat them if you didn''t suck so much!"'
 					'Timofey tries to defend himself. "It''s not my fault. Nush and <<$pcs_nickname>> are just too good."'
 					'Before Maksim can respond, Anushka cuts him off. "It''s not Timo''s fault, and you know it. When you fall behind, you get too aggressive, and don''t work with Timofey. You just try to win it on your own. Also, you''re just mad because you got beat by a girl... again." she says in a teasing tone, then sticks her tongue out at him.'
-					'Maksim''s eyes flare at Anushka and it looks like he about to scream at her again until she interjects. "Calm down, we don''t want dad in here again." With that, he shuts his mouth and glances at the door, then glares at Anushka.'
+					'Maksim''s eyes flare at Anushka and it looks like he''s about to scream at her again until she interjects. "Calm down, we don''t want Dad in here again." He shuts his mouth and glances at the door, then glares at Anushka.'
 					*nl
-					'"Get out... get out of our room!" he says as he tries to shove her off the bed.'
-					'Anushka gets up. "Oh my God you are such a baby, I don''t even know why I bother playing with you."'
-					'He pushes her towards the door after she gets up. "You only play with us to bully us. I don''t want to play with you anymore."'
-					'Anushka sounds exasperated. "Fine then you little brat, I won''t." She turns towards you. "Come on, let''s go before this little shit starts to cry."'
-					'Maksim starts to yell "Go suck a cock or something!", but catches himself and lowers his voice partway through'
-					'Timofey runs up to his sister. "You will play with us again won''t you?" he asks in a somewhat pleading tone.'
-					'Instantly, Anushka eases up, and her anger seems to melt away. "Some other time squirt." she says to him with a smile and ruffles his hair, much to his annoyance.'
+					'"Get out... Get out of our room!" he says as he tries to shove her off the bed.'
+					'Anushka gets up. "Oh my God, you''re such a baby! I don''t even know why I bother playing with you."'
+					'He pushes her towards the door. "You only play with us to bully us! I don''t want to play with you anymore!"'
+					'Anushka sounds exasperated. "Fine then, you little brat! I won''t!" She turns towards you. "Come on, let''s go before this little shit starts to cry."'
+					'"Go suck a cock!" Maksim starts to yell, but catches himself and lowers his voice partway through.'
+					'Timofey runs up to his sister. "You will play with us again, won''t you?" he asks in a somewhat pleading tone.'
+					'Anushka instantly eases up, and her anger seems to melt away. "Some other time, squirt..." she says with a smile and ruffles his hair, much to his annoyance.'
 					'As she closes the door and leaves, you can hear Maksim berating his brother for being a pussy and pleading with their sister to play games with them.'
 				end
-				act 'Go to Anushka''s room':AnushkaLoc=2&gt'anush_bedroom','anushroom'
+				act 'Go to Anushka''s room': AnushkaLoc = 2 & gt 'anush_bedroom','anushroom'
 			end
 		end
 	end

+ 69 - 72
locations/dreams.qsrc

@@ -5,13 +5,13 @@ menu_off = 1
 if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if stepdadqw = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/vladimir/sex/bath_voyer_1.jpg"></center>'
-		'Today you had a very strange dream: You were blindfolded, having sex with a stranger. After the two of you are done you remove the blindfold and recognize the stranger to be your stepfather.'
+		'You had a very strange dream: You were blindfolded while having sex with a stranger. When you were done, you removed the blindfold to see your stepfather grinning at you.'
 		pcs_horny = 100
 		stepdadqw += 1
 	elseif canBraidHair = 0 and mid($start_type,1,2) ! 'sg' and pcs_hairlng > 80:
 		canBraidHair = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/braid.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about the time your sister taught you how to braid your hair. She was happy to help you out and teach you how to do it, it was one of your more memorable sister bonding moments the two of you had not long before you moved out.'
+		'You dream about the time your sister taught you how to braid your hair. It was one of the more memorable sister bonding moments the two of you had not long before you moved out.'
 	elseif succubusQW = 1 or succubusQW = 2:
 		!this is for initial dream and a reoccuring dream if the feeling was ignored
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/succubdream.jpg"></center>'
@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		end
 	else
 		if $start_type[1] = 'tg':
-			temp = rand(1, 10)
+			temp = rand(1,10)
 			if temp = 1:
 				'You have hazy dreams about your past.'
 			elseif temp = 2:
@@ -93,91 +93,89 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hypno_dreams':
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/clinic/therapist/sex/schoolSitBlow2.mp4"></video></center>'
 		'You dream that you''re sucking someone''s cock.'
 		if guy = 0:
-			'You''ve never done this with a guy before, but for some reason it just feels... right. You can''t will yourself to look up at who''s dick you are sucking.'
+			'You''ve never done this with a guy before, but for some reason it just feels... right. You can''t will yourself to look up and see whose dick you''re sucking though.'
 		else
-			'It almost feel reals, like you''re actually sucking cock, and it feels good! But You can''t will yourself to look up at who''s dick you are sucking.'
+			'It almost feel real, like you''re actually sucking cock, and it feels good! However, you can''t will yourself to look up and see whose dick you''re sucking.'
 		end
 	elseif ivrand = 2:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/clinic/therapist/sex/throatFuck1.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You dream that your throat is being fucked hard and deep. It hurts and you can''t breath, but you just sit still and allow yourself to be used. The man''s balls rythmically slap against your face as he buries his cock into your throat.'
+		'You dream that your throat is being fucked hard and deep. It hurts and you can''t breathe, but you just sit still and allow yourself to be used. The man''s balls rythmically slap against your face as he buries his cock into your throat.'
 		if guy = 0:
-			'You''ve never done anything like this before and even though you can hardly breath, it actually feels good... Besides the balls slapping you in the face, you can''t tell who''s fucking you.'
+			'You''ve never done anything like this before and even though you can hardly breathe, it actually feels good. You can''t tell who''s fucking you though.'
 		else
-			'It almost feels real, like you actually have a huge cock down your throat! Your throat hurts, but for some reason you feel like you are on the edge of an orgasm. Besides the balls slapping you in the face, you can''t tell who''s fucking you.'
+			'It almost feels real, like you actually have a huge cock down your throat! Your throat hurts, but for some reason you feel like you''re on the edge of an orgasm. You can''t tell who''s fucking you though.'
 		end
 	elseif ivrand = 3:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/clinic/therapist/sex/hypnoAnalPiledriver1.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You dream that you are being fucked hard in your ass. Your legs are pulled up over your head and you are desperatly stimulating your clit.'
+		'You dream that you''re being fucked hard in your ass. Your legs are pulled up over your head and you''re desperately stimulating your clit.'
 		if guy = 0:
-			'You''ve never had sex before, but it feels amazing! You can''t tell who is fucking you though.'
+			'You''ve never had sex before, but it feels amazing! You can''t tell who''s fucking you though.'
 		else
-			'It almost feels real, like you''re actually getting your ass rammed full of cock and it feels great! But you can''t tell who''s fucking you.'
+			'It almost feels real, like you''re actually getting your ass rammed full of cock. It feels great, but you can''t tell who''s fucking you.'
 		end
 	elseif ivrand = 4:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/clinic/therapist/sex/hypnoRide4.mp4"></video></center>'
 		
 		if dreamedOfTherapistFucking = 2:
-			'You dream that you are riding your therapist''s cock. You keep slaming your pussy into his massive rod as hard as you can and your tits flop around wildly as you do so.'
-			'His huge cock bumps against your cervix. It feels wonderful. You feel a deep craving to feel his seed pump into you.'
+			'You dream that you''re riding your therapist''s cock. You keep slaming your pussy onto his massive rod as hard as you can, his huge cock bumping against your cervix. It feels wonderful and you feel a deep craving to feel his seed pump into you.'
 		else
-			'You dream that you are riding someones cock. You keep slaming your pussy into his massive rod as hard as you can and your tits flop around wildly as you do so.'
+			'You dream that you''re riding someone''s cock. You keep slaming your pussy into his massive rod as hard as you can and your tits flop around wildly as you do so.'
 			if guy = 0:
 				'You''ve never done something like this. Something deep inside hurts everytime you sit all the way down, but it also feels good! You can''t will yourself to turn and look at who you are riding.'
 			else
-				'It almost feels real, like you''re actually riding someones huge cock! You can feel the tip bumping against your cervix and it hurts but feels good too. You can''t will yourself to turn and look at who you are riding.'
+				'It almost feels real, like you''re actually riding someone''s huge cock! You can''t will yourself to turn and look at who you''re riding though.'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif ivrand = 5:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/clinic/therapist/sex/hypnoFuckCouchKneel1.mp4"></video></center>'
 		if dreamedOfTherapistFucking = 2:
-			'You dream that you are being fucked hard from behind by your therapist. You are on your hands and knees.'
-			'Your wet pussy greedily squelches each time he thrusts his cock aggressively into you. It feels so good...'
+			'You dream that you''re being fucked hard from behind by your therapist.'
+			'Your wet pussy greedily squelches each time he aggressively thrusts his cock into you. It feels so good...'
 		else
-			'You dream that you are being fucked hard from behind. You are on your hands and knees.'
+			'You dream that you''re being fucked hard from behind on your hands and knees.'
 			if guy = 0:
-				'You''ve never had sex before, but it feels amazing! You can''t tell who is fucking you and you can''t will yourself to look behind you.'
+				'You''ve never had sex before, but it feels amazing! You can''t tell who''s fucking you and you can''t will yourself to look behind you.'
 			else
-				'It almost feels real, like you''re actually getting your pussy rammed full of cock and it feels great! You can''t tell who is fucking you and you can''t will yourself to look behind you.'
+				'It almost feels real, like you''re actually getting your pussy rammed full of cock and it feels great! You can''t tell who''s fucking you and you can''t will yourself to look behind you.'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif ivrand = 6:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/clinic/therapist/sex/schoolDoggy3.mp4"></video></center>'
 		if dreamedOfTherapistFucking = 2:
-			'You dream that you are being fucked hard from behind by your therapist. Your hands are being held behind your back.'
-			'His massive cock stretches your pussy, you feel wonderfully full.'
+			'You dream that you are being fucked hard from behind by your therapist as your hands are being held behind your back.'
+			'His massive cock stretches your pussy and you feel wonderfully full.'
 		else
-			'You dream that you are being fucked hard from behind. Your hands are being held behind your back.'
+			'You dream that you''re being fucked hard from behind as your hands are being held behind your back.'
 			if guy = 0:
-				'You''ve never had sex before, but it feels amazing! You can''t tell who is fucking you and you can''t will yourself to look behind you.'
+				'You''ve never had sex before, but it feels amazing! You can''t tell who''s fucking you and you can''t will yourself to look behind you.'
 			else
-				'It almost feels real, like your actually getting your pussy rammed full of cock and it feels great! You can''t tell who is fucking you and you can''t will yourself to look behind you.'
+				'It almost feels real, like your actually getting your pussy rammed full of cock and it feels great! You can''t tell who''s fucking you and you can''t will yourself to look behind you.'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif ivrand = 7:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/clinic/therapist/sex/schoolFuckCouchBack1.mp4"></video></center>'
 		if dreamedOfTherapistFucking <= 0:dreamedOfTherapistFucking = 1
 		if dreamedOfTherapistFucking = 2:
-			'You dream that you are being fucked hard in the pussy by your therapist.'
-			'You spread your legs as wide as you can so his cock can go as deep as possible. It feels amazing.'
+			'You dream that you''re being fucked hard in the pussy by your therapist. You spread your legs as wide as you can so his cock can go as deep as possible. It feels amazing.'
 		else
-			'You dream that you are being fucked hard in the pussy. You are spreading and holding your legs as wide as possible so their cock goes as deep as possible.'
+			'You dream that you''re being fucked hard in the pussy. You''re spreading and holding your legs as wide as possible so their cock goes as deep as possible.'
 			if guy = 0:
 				'You''ve never had sex before, but it feels amazing! You try to focus and realize... your therapist is fucking you?'
 			else
-				'It almost feels real, like your actually getting your pussy rammed full of cock and it feels great! You try to focus and realize... your therapist is fucking you?'
+				'It almost feels real, like you''re actually getting your pussy rammed full of cock and it feels great! You try to focus and realize... your therapist is fucking you?'
 			end
 		end
 	end
 	''
 	if guy = 0:
-		'You wake up feeling strange and excited, even though you have never had sex the dream felt very real.'
+		'You wake up feeling strange and excited. Even though you''ve never had sex, the dream felt very real.'
 	elseif pcs_vag > 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0:
-		'You have never had a cock in your pussy and yet the sensations from the dream felt very real and have gotten you a little excited.'
+		'You''ve never had a cock in your pussy before, yet the sensations from the dream felt very real and have gotten you a little excited.'
 	elseif stat['vaginal'] > 0 or pcs_vag > 0:
 		'It seems your <<$vaginatipe>> pussy urgently needs some attention.'
 	end
 	if dreamedOfTherapistFucking = 1:
-		'Why was your therapist fucking you though? Maybe you should <font color=grey><s>be worried</s></font> <i>talk to your therapist about it.</i>'
+		'Why was your therapist fucking you though? Maybe you should <font color=grey><s>be worried</s></font> <i>talk to him about it.</i>'
 	elseif dreamedOfTherapistFucking = 2:
 		'What you did with your therapist felt good... really good. Your pussy throbs simply thinking about it. You lay in bed absentmindedly fantasizing of ways that he could fuck you.'
 	end
@@ -204,28 +202,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'd_dreams':
 		'You dream about an unknown girl, running in the pouring rain on a dark and narrow street.'
 	elseif ivrand = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about your smiling mother standing in a room full of old things from the past or last century. Strange. What could it mean?'
+		'You dream about your smiling mother standing in a room full of old things from the past. Strange. What could it mean?'
 	elseif ivrand = 6:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream6.jpg"></center>'
 		'You dream about a rider, standing by the lake, surrounded by high and steep mountains.'
 	elseif ivrand = 7:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream7.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about a scary man with charred skin, holding a strange creature on a chain, ready to fight a white haired middle-aged guy with a sword in his hand. It is probably time to stop watching TV...'
+		'You dream about a scary man with charred skin, holding a strange creature on a chain, ready to fight a white haired middle-aged guy with a sword in his hand. It''s probably time to stop watching TV before bed...'
 	elseif ivrand = 8:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream8.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about the white-haired guy again, but he is noticeably aged and has with a thick beard. Next to him stands a beautiful white haired girl. Maybe it''s his daughter? Why do you even have dreams about it?'
+		'You dream about the white-haired guy again, but he''s noticeably aged and has a thick beard. Next to him stands a beautiful white haired girl. Maybe it''s his daughter?'
 	elseif ivrand = 9:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream9.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about standing in a street among other people, looking at a nuclear explosion. It is really scary!'
+		'You dream about standing in a street among other people, looking at a nuclear explosion. It''s really scary!'
 	elseif ivrand = 10:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream10.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about a futuristic looking street littered in garbage.'
+		'You dream about a futuristic looking street littered with garbage.'
 	elseif ivrand = 11:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream11.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about a beautiful and majestic Cathedral on the banks of the river.'
+		'You dream about a beautiful and majestic cathedral on the banks of the river.'
 	elseif ivrand = 12:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream12.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about being at a lake in the winter watching a dark figure. He is standing in a pavilion in the middle of the lake. The pale light of the moon gives the scene an eerie aura.'
+		'You dream about being at a lake in the winter watching a dark figure. He''s standing in a pavilion in the middle of the lake, the pale light of the moon giving the scene an eerie aura.'
 	elseif ivrand = 13:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/dream13.jpg"></center>'
 		'You had a nightmare about a scary clown that tries to lure you into the sewers.'
@@ -241,22 +239,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex_dreams':
 		'You dream about having sex at the poolside of an expensive mansion with an attractive athletic man. You bounce up and down on his cock while he firmly grasps your ass. He starts to groan and tense up so you increase the speed of your bouncing and...'
 	elseif ivrand = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/sex2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream about having passionate sex with a stranger on a couch. He gently kisses you and takes your breasts into his hands and fondles them, while at the same time thrusting his cock in and out of your pussy.'
+		'You dream about having passionate sex with a stranger on a couch. He gently kisses you and takes your breasts into his hands and fondles them while thrusting his cock in and out of your pussy.'
 	elseif ivrand = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/sex3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are on a beach with a stranger. He kisses your neck while you lie in the missionary position on the sand as he pumps his cock rhythmically into your pussy.'
+		'You dream that you''re on a beach with a stranger. He kisses your neck while you lie in the missionary position on the sand as he pumps his cock rhythmically into your pussy.'
 	elseif ivrand = 4:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/sex4.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are bent over a couch with a man behind you pushing his cock in and out of you, while firmly grasping your ass. You are biting your lips from the pleasure.'
+		'You dream that you''re bent over a couch with a man behind you pushing his cock in and out of you while firmly grasping your ass. You''re biting your lips from the pleasure.'
 		
 	elseif ivrand = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/sex5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are sitting on top of a guy, bouncing up and down on his cock.'
+		'You dream that you''re sitting on top of a guy, bouncing up and down on his cock.'
 	end
 	if stat['think_virgin'] = 1:
-		'You wake up feeling strange and excited, even though you have never had sex the dream felt very real.'
+		'You wake up feeling strange and excited. Even though you''ve never had sex, the dream felt very real.'
 	elseif pcs_vag > 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0:
-		'You have never had a cock in your pussy and yet the sensations from the dream felt very real and have gotten you a little excited.'
+		'You''ve never had a cock in your pussy before, yet the sensations from the dream felt very real and have gotten you a little excited.'
 	else
 		'It seems your <<$vaginatipe>> pussy urgently needs some attention.'
 	end
@@ -268,15 +266,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal_dreams':
 	ivrand = rand(1,2)
 	if ivrand = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are bent over and a man is pumping your ass rhythmically with his cock while you caress your clit with your fingers.'
+		'You dream that you''re bent over as a man rhythmically pumps your ass with his cock while you caress your clit.'
 	elseif ivrand = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/anal2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are laying on your side and a guy is fucking your ass. You moan loudly from the feeling.'
+		'You dream that you''re laying on your side as a guy fucks your ass. You moan loudly from the sensation.'
 	end
 	if stat['anal'] = 0 and pcs_ass = 0:
-		'You wake up feeling strange and excited, even though you have never had anal sex the dream felt very real.'
+		'You wake up feeling strange and excited. Even though you''ve never had anal sex, the dream felt very real.'
 	elseif stat['anal'] = 0:
-		'You have never had a cock in your ass but the sensations from the dream felt very real and have gotten you a little excited.'
+		'You''ve never had a cock in your ass before, but the sensations from the dream felt very real and have gotten you a little excited.'
 	else
 		'It seems your <<$anustipe>> anus urgently needs some attention.'
 	end
@@ -288,15 +286,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_dreams':
 	ivrand = rand(1,2)
 	if ivrand = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are bent down with your ass sticking out sucking a guy''s dick during sunset near the ocean.'
+		'You dream about sucking a guy''s dick during sunset near the ocean.'
 	elseif ivrand = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/bj2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that are you tied to a staircase squatting down with you legs wide open sucking and savouring the dick of a guy dressed in a nice and expensive looking suit.'
+		'You have a dream where you''re tied to a staircase, squatting down with your legs wide open sucking and savouring the dick of a guy dressed in an expensive looking suit.'
 	end
 	if stat['bj'] = 0:
-		'You have never given anyone a blow job before but the feeling of the dick in your mouth felt very real, the dream has excited you a little.'
+		'You''ve never given anyone a blowjob before, but the feeling of the dick in your mouth felt very real. The dream has excited you a little.'
 	else
-		'It seems subconsciously you want to suck a dick.'
+		'It seems you subconsciously want to suck a dick...'
 	end
 	exit
 end
@@ -306,19 +304,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ero_dreams':
 	ivrand = rand(1,5)
 	if ivrand = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/ero1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are at a school where all the girls are required to attend lessons naked.'
+		'You dream that you''re at a school where all the girls are required to attend lessons naked.'
 	elseif ivrand = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/ero2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are naked caressing an athletic guy on the couch. He kisses your neck and slowly moves down to kiss your chest, flicking his tongue over your nipples.'
+		'You dream that you''re naked while caressing an athletic guy on the couch. He kisses your neck and slowly moves down to kiss your chest, flicking his tongue over your nipples.'
 	elseif ivrand = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/ero3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are naked in a shower with a man. He lathers your body paying special attention to your breasts and pussy, while his hard cock is bumping you in the back.'
+		'You dream that you''re in a shower with a man. He lathers your body, paying special attention to your breasts and pussy while his hard cock brushes against your back.'
 	elseif ivrand = 4:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/ero4.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are on a bed naked with a girl, you kiss and caress each other passionately,'
+		'You dream that you''re on a bed naked with a girl, kissing and caressing each other passionately,'
 	elseif ivrand = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/ero5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are naked making out with a stranger.'
+		'You dream that you''re naked while making out with a stranger.'
 	end
 	exit
 end
@@ -328,27 +326,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gang_dreams':
 	ivrand = rand(1,2)
 	if ivrand = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/gang1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that two men are fucking you. You are lying between them sucking one of them while the other one is pumping your ass.'
+		'You dream about two men fucking you. You''re lying between them sucking one of them while the other is fucking your ass.'
 	elseif ivrand = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sex/gang2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you are in-between two hot guys. One is fucking your pussy and the other one is fucking your ass. Both of them slam you with force causing you to moan loudly with pleasure.'
+		'You dream that you''re in-between two hot guys as one fucks your pussy and the other fucks your ass. Both of them fuck you with force, causing you to moan loudly with pleasure.'
 	end
 	if stat['think_virgin'] = 1 and pcs_ass = 0 and stat['anal'] = 0 and stat['bj'] = 0 and stat['hj'] = 0 and gang = 0 and guy = 0 and girl = 0:
-		'You haven''t even had normal sex, least of all a threesome. Even though you are excited, the dream still scared you a little.'
+		'You haven''t even had normal sex, least of all a threesome. Even though you''re excited, the dream still scared you a little.'
 	elseif stat['vaginal'] > 0 and pcs_ass = 0 and stat['anal'] = 0 and stat['bj'] = 0 and stat['hj'] = 0 and gang = 0:
 		'Even though you''ve had sex, the thought of a gangbang, even in a dream, is a little alarming.'
 	elseif pcs_vag = 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0 and pcs_ass > 0 and gang = 0 and guy > 0 and girl = 0:
-		'Even though you are only technically still a virgin, the thought of a gangbang, even in a dream, is a little alarming.'
+		'Even though you''re technically still a virgin, the thought of a gangbang, even in a dream, is a little alarming.'
 	elseif pcs_ass = 0 and stat['anal'] = 0 and gang = 0 and guy > 0 and girl = 0:
-		'It seems that in your dreams one guy at a time is not enough...'
+		'It seems that, in your dreams, one guy at a time is not enough...'
 	elseif gang > 0 and guy > 0 and girl = 0:
 		'It seems that your experience with swinging with a few guys was not in vain and your subconscious is actively reminding you about it.'
 	elseif gang > 0 and guy = 0 and girl > 0:
-		'It seems, that your experience with swinging with several girls was not in vain and your subconscious is actively reminding you about it.'
+		'It seems that your experience with swinging with several girls was not in vain and your subconscious is actively reminding you about it.'
 	elseif gang > 0 and guy > 0 and girl > 0:
-		'It seems, that your experience with swinging was not in vain and your subconscious is actively reminding you about it.'
+		'It seems that your experience with swinging was not in vain and your subconscious is actively reminding you about it.'
 	else
-		'The dream felt very real and left you a little excited.'
+		'The dream felt very real and left you feeling a little excited.'
 	end
 	exit
 end
@@ -381,20 +379,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'succub_dreams':
 		else
 			$sucselftmp = $sucself1
 		end
-		'You dream that you are arguing with <<$sucselftmp>>.'
+		'You dream that you''re arguing with <<$sucselftmp>>.'
 		'You don''t know what it''s about, but you think you won...'
 	end
 	if ivrand = 4:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sucrandream4.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you''re walking a crowded convention hall filled with people in costumes.'
-		'You don''t know why you''re here until you see <i>her</i>, then you just <b>know</b> why you''re here...'
-		'You''re here for <b>reproduction!</b>'
+		'You dream that you''re walking through a crowded convention hall filled with people in costumes.'
+		'You don''t know why you''re here until you see <i>her</i>, then you just <b>know</b>. You''re here for <b>reproduction</b>!'
 	end
 	if ivrand = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/bedroom/dream/sucrandream5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dream that you encounter another Succubus, but she''s in <i>your</i> territory!'
+		'You dream about an encounter with another succubus on <i>your</i> territory!'
 		if succhungry < (0 - 1 - succublvl):
-			'But, you''re sated, so it doesn''t bother you.'
+			'You''re sated however, so it doesn''t bother you.'
 		else
 			'You can''t allow that!'
 		end