Merge remote-tracking branch 'Vengeance_11/master'

# Conflicts:
#	locations/natalia_pavlova.qsrc

locations/albina_starlets.qsrc

@@ -335,7 +335,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'starlets':
 							if AlbinaQW['StarletCustomer'] = 1:
 								AlbinaQW['StarletsCustomerCount'] = 1
 								AlbinaQW['StarletPay'] = rand(3,6)
-								'You see a flabby, balding Armenian man in his 50s wearing an expensive suit approach Albina and start talking to her. She avoids eye contact and looks rather uncomfortable talking to him.'
+								'You see a flabby and balding middle aged Armenian man wearing an expensive suit approach Albina and start talking to her. She avoids eye contact and looks rather uncomfortable talking to him.'
 							elseif AlbinaQW['StarletCustomer'] = 2:
 								AlbinaQW['StarletsCustomerCount'] = 2
 								AlbinaQW['StarletPay'] = rand(6,9)
@@ -1494,7 +1494,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'StarletsPracticeMissed':
 		act 'Train with Starlets': gt 'albina_starlets', 'starlets'
 	else
 	  gs 'npc_relationship', 'set', 'A23', 10
-		'You are walk into the hall and freeze when you clock a furious Albina heading straight for you. You barely have time to react before she grabs your shirt and pulls you up close, silencing the hall as everyone looks at you.'
+		'You walk into the hall and freeze when you clock a furious Albina heading straight for you. You barely have time to react before she grabs your shirt and pulls you up close, silencing the hall as everyone looks at you.'
 		'Albina glares directly into your eyes. "ARE YOU DOING THIS TO MOCK ME YOU FUCKING BITCH?! I GAVE YOU ONE. LAST. FUCKING. CHANCE AND YOU THROW IT BACK IN MY FUCKING FACE?!" She releases you, but still gets up in your face. "You''re done. Get the fuck out of here and don''t let me catch you here again, you hear me?!"'
 		'She then crosses her arms and glares at you until you leave. With the other girls staring at you, you shamefully walk out of the hall.'
 		act 'Leave':AlbinaQW['StarletsJoined'] = -1 & gt 'pav_commcenter'

locations/gschool_nerd_chats.qsrc

@@ -838,7 +838,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'zinaida':
 			'You understand she''s only available because she has nothing better to do, but you''re glad you don''t have to spend the break all alone at least.'
 			*nl
 			'She soon starts talking about video games. It seems she doesn''t mind who she''s talking to as long as somebody listens. She tells you some interesting stories that happened to her, and complains about the prices of the games.'
-			'"On the other hand, there are always free games to play..." she continues but points out why free to play games can be more expensive than some of the most popular video games in the long run.'
+			'"On the other hand, there are always free games to play..." she continues, but points out why free to play games can be more expensive than some of the most popular video games in the long run.'
 			'After continuing to talk for a few more minutes, she takes her notes out of her backpack. "We''ll continue this next time, maybe. But for now, I''d like to check my homework before the lesson starts. See you." With that, she turns to her desk and starts revising her homework.'
 		end
 	end
@@ -856,132 +856,127 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'natalia':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big240.jpg"></center>'
 	if VKAftermathEvent > 0 and VKNatFollowup = 0:
 		VKNatFollowup = 1
-		'You sit next to Natalia and she quickly turns to you with a warm smile. "<<$pcs_nickname>>! It''s so great to see you! I hope you''re feeling better? You''ve been through so much." You give her a forced smile as you reply. "I''m fine Nat. Thanks for caring, though."' 
-		'Natalia''s smile turns to a frown as she responds. "You''re still having the nightmares, aren''t you? I''m looking for a way to help you with those. I plan on asking my mother for something. She used to get a lot of nightmares when she was young, so she might know of some good ways to get rid of them." You place your hand on her shoulder. "Don''t worry about me Nat. I''ll be fine." Nat places her hand on yours, then nods before you get up and head back to class.'
+		'You sit next to Natalia and she quickly turns to you with a warm smile. "<<$pcs_nickname>>! It''s so great to see you! I hope you''re feeling better? You''ve been through so much."' 
+		'You give her a forced smile as you reply. "I''m fine Nat. Thanks for caring, though."' 
+		'Natalia''s smile turns to a frown as she responds. "You''re still having the nightmares, aren''t you? My mother used to get a lot of nightmares when she was young, so she might know of some good ways to get rid of them."' 
+		'You place your hand on her shoulder. "Don''t worry about me, Nat. I''ll be fine." Natalia places her hand on yours, then nods before you get up and head back to class.'
 	else
 		if NikoEv >= 17 and VKNatFollowup = 1:
 			VKNatFollowup = 2
-			'You approach Natalia and her eyes immediately light up. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! It''s always good to see you. I hope things have been going better with Niko?" You give her an approving nod. "Well if you ever need to talk about anything, then please stop by. I always look forward to chatting with you." You rub Natalia''s shoulder as she gives you a warm smile before you get up to go to your next class.'
+			'You approach Natalia and her eyes immediately light up. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! It''s always good to see you. I hope things have been going better with Niko?"' 
+			'You give her an approving nod. "Well if you ever need to talk about anything, then please stop by. I always look forward to chatting with you." You rub Natalia''s shoulder as she gives you a warm smile before you get up to go to your next class.'
 		else
 			if nataliaQW['introduction'] = 0: 
 				gs 'natalia_pavlova', 'first_chat'
 			else
 				if fame['pav_slut'] > 175:
 					if npc_rel['A240'] <= 30:
-						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you and says in a nervous voice, "Oh, hello, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi Natalia, just thought I''d come and say hello," you say. "I see you are reading again. May I ask what it''s about?"'
-						'"It''s called Anna Karenina by Leo Tolstoy. It''s a famous book about a woman named Anna who doesn''t love her husband but loves a man named Alexei Vronsky and explores the relationship with her son to whom she''s totally devoted."'
-						'"Sounds interesting, Natalia. But, I bet it won''t end well." You say with a smile.'
-						'"Probably not <<$pcs_nickname>>. It''s written by a Russian, after all." Natalia says with a rueful smile. "Look, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I don''t want to be rude, but unless you clean up your act, I can''t be seen talking to you as I don''t want to get a bad reputation too." With that, she looks away from you and returns to reading her book.'
-						'"Okay, Natalia, I''d best start heading to class anyway."'
-						'You turn away and wait for the next class to begin thinking she seems nice. At least she didn''t completely blank you, and she was polite, which made a nice change from the typical rudeness you encounter from most of your classmates.'
+						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Oh. Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>..." she says in a nervous voice.'
+						'"Hey Natalia, just thought I''d come and say hello," you reply. "I see you''re reading again. What''s it about?"'
+						'"It''s called ''Anna Karenina'' by Leo Tolstoy. It''s a famous book about a woman who loves a man that isn''t her husband. It also explores her relationship with her son, to whom she''s totally devoted."'
+						'"Sounds interesting. I bet it won''t end well, though," you reply with a smile.'
+						'"Probably not. It''s written by a Russian after all," she says before frowning. "Look, I don''t want to be rude, but unless you clean up your act, I can''t be seen talking to you. I don''t want to get a bad reputation." She returns to reading her book without waiting for an answer.'
+						'You turn away and wait for the next class. At least she didn''t completely blank you, and she was polite, which made a nice change from the typical attitude you get from most of your classmates.'
 					elseif npc_rel['A240'] <= 40:
-						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you and says in a nervous voice, "Hello, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi Natalia, I see you are reading again. What is this one about?"'
-						'"It''s called The Master and Margarita by Mikhail Bulgakov. It''s quite a famous book with loads of magical stuff like cats riding on trams and money falling from the sky."'
-						'"Well, we could all do with a bit of fantasy to take away our troubles." You say with a rueful smile.'
-						'"Umm... Yes, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I guess so." Natalia slightly lowers her already quiet voice and continues, "Sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m sorry, but I can''t be associated with you unless you improve your reputation." With that, she looks away from you and returns to reading her book.'
-						'You turn away, feeling sad, and wait for the next class. Although you have a bad reputation, you could work on improving it as it might make your days easier at school and with your parents. Plus, doing so may also make it easier to gain some friends.'
+						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Oh. Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>..." she says in a nervous voice.'
+						'"Hey Natalia, I see you''re reading again. What''s this one about?"'
+						'"It''s called ''The Master and Margarita'' by Mikhail Bulgakov. It''s quite a famous book with loads of magical stuff like cats riding on trams and money falling from the sky."'
+						'"Well, we could all do with a bit of fantasy to take away our troubles," you say with a rueful smile.'
+						'"Umm... Yeah, I guess so." Natalia slightly lowers her already quiet voice. "I''m sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I can''t be associated with you unless you improve your reputation." She returns to reading her book without waiting for an answer.'
+						'You turn away and wait for the next class. Although you have a bad reputation, you could work on improving it in order to gain some friends.'
 					elseif npc_rel['A240'] <= 50:
-						'As usual, Natalia sits with the nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she looks up and quietly says, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi Natalia, You''re reading again, not that I''m surprised. So what''s this book all about, another romantic novel?" You ask with a smile.'
-						'Natalia looks back at you. "Yes, it is, and it''s another famous Russian love story. This is one of the most famous short stories."'
-						'"Oh! A short love story. In that case, it can''t be Russian!"'
-						'"Well, it is actually; it''s called The Lady With The Little Dog, and it''s by Anton Chekhov."'
-						'"Really, Natalia! I didn''t think a Russian could ever write a short love story!" you reply.'
-						'"Well, he did in this case. It''s about Anna and Dmitri, who have unhappy marriages and meet in Yalta, where they are on holiday without their spouses. Although the affair ends at the end of the holiday, their feelings remain."'
-						'"Sounds sad, Natalia." You reply.'
-						'"Yes, I guess it is. Such a shame if you don''t have love in your life with your partner. Also, is it better for them to have experienced it but know it was only fleeting? Look, Sveta, it''s not that I don''t like you. Still, I can''t associate with you unless you do something to improve your reputation." With that, she looks away from you and returns to reading her book.'
-						'You turn away, and as and wait for the next class, you reflect on what she said. You know you have a bad reputation, but there is still time to improve it. Things could improve for you in school and at home with time and effort.'
+						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Oh. Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>..." she says in a quiet voice.'
+						'"Hey Natalia. So what''s this book about? Another romantic novel?" you ask with a smile.'
+						'Natalia looks back at you. "Yes, it is. It''s another famous Russian love story, and one of the most famous short stories."'
+						'"What''s it called?" you ask.'
+						'"''The Lady With The Little Dog'' by Anton Chekhov. It''s about Anna and Dmitri, who both have unhappy marriages. They''re both on holiday in Yalta without their spouses and end up having an affair. Although their affair ends with the holiday, their feelings for each other remain."'
+						'"Sounds sad," you reply.'
+						'"Yes, I guess it is." She looks up at you. "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s not that I don''t like you, but I can''t associate with you unless you do something to improve your reputation." She returns to reading her book without waiting for an answer.'
+						'You turn away, and as and wait for the next class, you reflect on what she said.'
 					elseif npc_rel['A240'] <= 70:
-						'Natalia is sitting with the nerds at her desk, and as usual, she''s reading a book as you approach. As Natalia notices you, she looks up and quietly says, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi, Natalia, What a surprise... you''re reading again!." You say with a friendly smile. "So, what''s book is this?"'
-						'"You know me too well, <<$pcs_nickname>>. This is one of the most famous Russian romantic novels. It was even awarded the Nobel prize in Literature."'
-						'"Oh! Wow! So what''s it called? Come on Natalia, wet my appetite for it..."'
-						'Natalia has a short quiet giggle. "Okay, this one is Doctor Zhivago by Boris Pasternak, and it''s an epic story set during the Russian civil war..."'
-						'At this point, you interject, "Well, this one won''t end well then! Anyway, whoever heard of war being civil?" you reply.'
-						'"Well, in this story, Yuri, the doctor, loves his wife."'
-						'"Well, I''m glad to hear that. But I guess tragedy strikes." You reply.'
-						'"Well, he gets sent off to war and while at the front, he meets someone else and also falls in love with her. The book explores the torment he feels between his love for both of them."'
-						'"So come on, Natalia, what happens next."'
-						'"Nope, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m not going to spoil it for you. You''ll just have to get the book and read it yourself." She replies with a broad grin. "Sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have to go. I''ve probably already spent too long talking to you and want to avoid rumours about my reputation. Oh, the bell sounds, so we best head to class." She turns away and heads to the next lesson.'
-						'You leave and again reflect on what she just said. You still have a terrible reputation, but if you improve it, with time and effort, things could improve for you, and your school life may get more pleasant.'
+						'Natalia is sitting with the nerds, reading a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>," she says in a quiet voice.'
+						'"Hey Nat," you say with a friendly smile. "So what book is this?"'
+						'She smiles. "This is one of the most famous Russian romantic novels. It was even awarded the Nobel prize in Literature."'
+						'"Oh? What''s it called?"'
+						'"''Doctor Zhivago'' by Boris Pasternak," she replies. "It''s an epic story set during the Russian civil war."'
+						'"Well, this one won''t end well then! Whoever heard of war being civil?" you reply.'
+						'"Well, in this story, Yuri, the doctor, loves his wife..."'
+						'"But I guess tragedy strikes?" you ask.'
+						'"He gets sent off to war and while at the front, he meets someone else and also falls in love with her. The book explores the torment he feels between his love for both of them."'
+						'"And what happens next?"'
+						'"No, I''m not going to spoil it for you! You''ll just have to read it yourself," she replies with a broad grin. "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I have to go. I''ve probably already spent too long talking to you and want to avoid rumours about my reputation." She turns away without waiting for your reply.'
+						'You reflect on what she just said. You still have a terrible reputation, but if you improve it, your school life may get more pleasant.'
 					else
-						'Natalia is at her usual desk with the nerds, and as usual, she''s engrossed in a book as you approach. However, as Natalia notices you, she looks up at you and quietly says, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi, Natalia, What a surprise... you''re reading again!." You say with a friendly smile and a small giggle. "So let me guess... Another romantic novel that ends in some sort of tragedy?" You ask, giggling.'
-						'Natalia gives you a short smile. "Ahh! Caught you there, <<$pcs_nickname>>. But, unfortunately, you''re only half right this time."'
-						'"Oh! Well, you''re definitely reading, so it''s not a historical romance, then... So what''s this one about?"'
-						'Natalia has a small giggle. "Well, this isn''t a novel at all."'
-						'You are confused. "Eh? Surely not schoolwork, Natalia? Did you get behind or something?" you reply.'
-						'Natalia laughs. "No, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I always do my homework at home or the library. No, this is a book of poems by Marina Tsvetaeva."'
-						'"Right, well, that''s a bit different then." You reply.'
-						'"Sort of..." Natalia replies. "It still explores love, heartbreak and disappointment but has some lovely stuff where the poems explore fluttery feelings and infatuation and look at the differences between infatuation and love."'
+						'Natalia is sitting with the nerds, engrossed in a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>," she says in a quiet voice.'
+						'"Hey Natalia," you reply with a friendly smile. "Let me guess. Another romantic novel that ends in some sort of tragedy?"'
+						'She gives you a short smile. "Unfortunately, you''re only half right this time."'
+						'"Oh? So what''s this one about?"'
+						'She giggles. "Well, this isn''t a novel at all."'
+						'You''re confused. "Eh? Surely not schoolwork? Did you fall behind or something?" you reply.'
+						'She laughs. "No! This is a book of poems by Marina Tsvetaeva."'
+						'"That is different then," you reply.'
+						'"Sort of..." she replies. "It still explores love, heartbreak and disappointment but has some lovely stuff where the poems explore fluttery feelings and infatuation. They also look at the differences between infatuation and love."'
 						'"Guess there''s a big mixture of sad and happy stuff then?"'
-						'"Yep, <<$pcs_nickname>>. If you like that sort of work, it might be worth getting a copy; you can skip one of them if you don''t like it too much." Then, after a brief pause, she continues, "Look, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I know you must think I''m trying to mother you when I keep telling you to improve your reputation, but you seem nice and friendly, and I just want to see you happy and not be bullied all the time. So please think about it."'
-						'"Actually, Natalia, it makes a nice change that someone cares and doesn''t bully or mock me. You are a good friend Natalia, thank you."'
-						'Just then, the bell sounds, so you both head to the next class separately.'
-						'As you leave, you take a moment to reflect on what she just said. Although you have a terrible reputation, improving it may still be possible. For example, suppose you are more discrete with time and effort. In that case, you could improve it, and things would get more manageable for you at school and home with the benefit that life may get more pleasant. Maybe you could even go to church and spend some quiet reflection.'
+						'"Yes. If you like that sort of thing, then it might be worth getting a copy; you can skip one of them if you don''t like it too much." After a brief pause, she continues. "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I know you must be tired of me always telling you to improve your reputation, but you seem nice, and I just want to see you happy and not being bullied all the time."'
+						'"Actually, it makes a nice change that someone actually cares and doesn''t mock me. You''re a good friend, Natalia."'
+						'The bell then sounds, so you both head to the next class separately.'
 					end
 				else
 					if npc_rel['A240'] <= 30:
-						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you and says quietly, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi Natalia, just thought I''d come and say hello," you say. "I see you are reading again. May I ask what it''s about?"'
-						'"Yes, well, it''s a famous Russian love story."'
-						'You giggle. "Oh, which one?"'
-						'"Really? I didn''t think anyone else was interested in this stuff <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Yes, I''d like to know. It''s also a way of getting to know you better, too," you reply.'
-						'"Well, it''s called Anna Karenina by Leo Tolstoy. It''s a very famous book about a woman named Anna. She doesn''t love her husband but instead loves a man named Alexei Vronsky and explores the relationship with her son to whom she''s devoted."'
-						'"Sounds interesting, Natalia. I bet it won''t end well." You say with a smile.'
-						'"Probably not <<$pcs_nickname>>. It''s written by a Russian, after all." Natalia says with a rueful smile.'
-						'"Okay thanks Natalia, I think we''d best start heading to class. Bye for now."'
+						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>," she says in a quiet voice.'
+						'"Hey Natalia, just thought I''d come and say hello," you reply. "I see you''re reading again. What''s it about?"'
+						'"Yes. It''s a famous Russian love story."'
+						'You smile. "Oh? Which one?"'
+						'"Really? I didn''t think anyone else was interested in this sort of thing..."'
+						'"Yes, I''d like to know. It''s a way of getting to know you better," you reply.'
+						'"It''s called ''Anna Karenina'' by Leo Tolstoy. It''s about a woman who loves a man that isn''t her husband. It also explores her relationship with her son, to whom she''s totally devoted."'
+						'"Sounds interesting. I bet it won''t end well, though," you reply with a smile.'
+						'"Probably not. It''s written by a Russian after all," she replies with a rueful smile.'
+						'"I think I''d best start heading to class. Bye for now," you say with a smile.'
 					elseif npc_rel['A240'] <= 40:
-						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, and as usual, she''s reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you and says quietly, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi Natalia, I see you are reading again. So what''s this book?"'
-						'"Yes, it''s another famous Russian love story, but this one has loads of magical stuff, like cats riding on trams and money falling from the sky."'
-						'You giggle. "Oh! Cats riding on trams, well, that''d be cool, and money falling from the sky?... Shame that doesn''t happen in real life!"'
-						'Natalia giggles along with you. "Yes, it''s a shame it''s only fantasy, <<$pcs_nickname>>!" She continues, "In this story, Margarita''s love for the master helps him as he''s afraid of his own ideas, but she has to make a huge sacrifice so that his novel doesn''t vanish and they can be safe together forever."'
-						'"So what''s it called, and who wrote it, Natalia?" you reply.'
-						'"Sounds interesting, Natalia. But, I bet it won''t end well." You say with a smile.'
-						'"Ah, yes, it''s called The Master and Margarita by Mikhail Bulgakov. It''s quite a famous book. Have you read it?"'
-						'"No, not yet, but it does sound interesting, Natalia. Thanks."'
-						'Just then, the bell sounds, so you start heading to class.'
+						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>..." she says in a quiet voice.'
+						'"Hey Natalia. So what''s this book about?"'
+						'"It''s another famous Russian love story, but this one has loads of magical stuff, like cats riding on trams and money falling from the sky."'
+						'You giggle. "Money falling from the sky? Shame that doesn''t happen in real life!"'
+						'Natalia giggles along with you. "In this story, Margarita''s love for the master helps him as he''s afraid of his own ideas, but she has to make a huge sacrifice so that his novel doesn''t vanish and they can be safe, together forever."'
+						'"So what''s it called?" you ask.'
+						'"It''s called ''The Master and Margarita'' by Mikhail Bulgakov. It''s quite a famous book. Have you read it?"'
+						'"No, but it does sound interesting. I bet it won''t end well though."'
+						'The bell then sounds, so you start heading to class.'
 					elseif npc_rel['A240'] <= 50:
-						'As usual, Natalia sits with the nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she looks up at you and, with a slight smile, says in a quiet voice, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi Natalia, You''re reading again, not that I''m surprised. So what''s this book all about, another romantic novel?" You ask with a smile.'
-						'Natalia smiles back at you. "Yes, it is, and it''s another famous Russian love story. This is one of the most famous short stories."'
-						'"Oh! A short love story. In that case, it can''t be Russian!"'
-						'Natalia giggles. "Well, it is actually; it''s called The Lady With The Little Dog, and it''s by Anton Chekhov."'
-						'"Really, Natalia! I didn''t think a Russian could ever write a short love story!" you reply.'
-						'"Well, he did in this case. It''s about Anna and Dmitri, who have unhappy marriages and meet in Yalta, where they are on holiday without their spouses. Although the affair ends at the end of the holiday, their feelings remain."'
-						'"Sounds sad, Natalia." You reply.'
-						'"Yes, it is. Such a shame if you don''t have love in your life with your partner. Also, is it better for them to have experienced it but know it was only fleeting?"'
-						'"Wow, that''s a deep question, Natalia. I hope that either circumstance won''t happen to either of us."'
-						'"Yes, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I don''t know which would be worse. There''s the bell, so we should get going to class."'
+						'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>," she says in a quiet voice with a slight smile.'
+						'"Hey Natalia. So what''s this book about? Another romantic novel?" you ask with a smile.'
+						'Natalia smiles back at you. "Yes, it is. It''s another famous Russian love story, and one of the most famous short stories."'
+						'"''The Lady With The Little Dog'' by Anton Chekhov. It''s about Anna and Dmitri, who both have unhappy marriages. They''re both on holiday in Yalta without their spouses and end up having an affair. Although their affair ends with the holiday, their feelings for each other remain."'
+						'"Sounds sad," you reply.'
+						'"Yes, it is, but is it better for them to have experienced love knowing it was only fleeting, than none at all?"'
+						'"Wow, that''s a deep question," you reply.'
+						'"Yeah, I don''t know which would be worse. Oh, there''s the bell! We should get going to class."'
 					elseif npc_rel['A240'] <= 70:
-						'Natalia is sitting with the nerds at her desk, and as usual, she''s reading a book as you approach. As Natalia notices you, she looks up at you and, with a big smile, says in a quiet voice, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi, Natalia, What a surprise... you''re reading again!." You say with a friendly smile and a small giggle. "So, what''s book is this?" You ask, smiling back at her.'
-						'Natalia smiles back at you. "You know me too well, <<$pcs_nickname>>. This is one of the most famous Russian romantic novels. It was even awarded the Nobel prize for literature."'
-						'"Oh! Wow! So what''s it called? Come on Natalia, wet my appetite for it..."'
-						'Natalia giggles. "Okay, well this one is called Doctor Zhivago by BNoris Pasternak and it''s an epic story set during the Russian civil war..."'
-						'At this point, you interject, "Well, this one won''t end well then! Anyway, whoever heard of war being civil?" you reply.'
-						'"Well, in this story, Yuri, the doctor, loves his wife."'
-						'"Well, I''m glad to hear that. But I guess tragedy strikes." You reply.'
-						'"Well, he gets sent off to war and while at the front, he meets someone else and also falls in love with her. The book explores the torment he feels between his love for both of them."'
-						'"So come on, Natalia, what happens next?"'
-						'"Nope, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m not going to spoil it for you. You''ll just have to get the book and read it yourself." She replies with a broad grin. "Oh, the bell sounds, so we best head to class." Again, she grins at you and gives you a friendly wave as she heads to the next lesson.'
+						'Natalia is sitting with the nerds, reading a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>," she says in a quiet voice with a smile.'
+						'"Hey Nat," you say with a friendly smile. "So what book is this?"'
+						'She smiles. "This is one of the most famous Russian romantic novels. It was even awarded the Nobel prize in Literature."'
+						'"Oh? What''s it called?"'
+						'"''Doctor Zhivago'' by Boris Pasternak," she replies. "It''s an epic story set during the Russian civil war."'
+						'"Well, this one won''t end well then! Whoever heard of war being civil?" you reply.'
+						'"Well, in this story, Yuri, the doctor, loves his wife..."'
+						'"But I guess tragedy strikes?" you ask.'
+						'"He gets sent off to war and while at the front, he meets someone else and also falls in love with her. The book explores the torment he feels between his love for both of them."'
+						'"And what happens next?"'
+						'"No, I''m not going to spoil it for you! You''ll just have to read it yourself," she replies with a broad grin. "Oh, there''s the bell! We best head to class." She grins at you and gives you a friendly wave as she heads to the next lesson.'
 					else
-						'Natalia is at her usual desk with the nerds, and as usual, she''s engrossed in a book as you approach. But, as Natalia notices you, she looks up at you and, with a big smile, says in a quiet voice, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-						'"Hi, Natalia, What a surprise... you''re reading again!." You say with a friendly smile and a small giggle. "So let me guess... Another romantic novel that ends in some sort of tragedy?" You ask, giggling.'
-						'Natalia smiles back at you. "Ahh! Caught you there, Sveta. But, unfortunately, you''re only half right this time."'
-						'"Oh! Well, you''re definitely reading, so it''s not a historical romance, then... So what''s this one about?"'
-						'Natalia giggles. "Well, this isn''t a novel at all."'
-						'You are confused. "Eh? Surely not schoolwork, Natalia? Did you get behind or something?" you reply.'
-						'Natalia laughs. "No, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I always do my homework at home or the library. No, this is a book of poems by Marina Tsvetaeva."'
-						'"Right, well, that''s a bit different then." You reply.'
-						'"Sort of..." Natalia replies. "It still explores love, heartbreak and disappointment. Though it has some lovely stuff. The poems explore fluttery feelings and infatuation and look at the differences between infatuation and love."'
+						'Natalia is sitting with the nerds, engrossed in a book. She glances up when she notices you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>," she says in a quiet voice.'
+						'"Hey Natalia," you reply with a friendly smile. "Let me guess. Another romantic novel that ends in some sort of tragedy?"'
+						'She gives you a short smile. "Unfortunately, you''re only half right this time."'
+						'"Oh? So what''s this one about?"'
+						'She giggles. "Well, this isn''t a novel at all."'
+						'You''re confused. "Eh? Surely not schoolwork? Did you fall behind or something?" you reply.'
+						'She laughs. "No! This is a book of poems by Marina Tsvetaeva."'
+						'"That is different then," you reply.'
+						'"Sort of..." she replies. "It still explores love, heartbreak and disappointment but has some lovely stuff where the poems explore fluttery feelings and infatuation. They also look at the differences between infatuation and love."'
 						'"Guess there''s a big mixture of sad and happy stuff then?"'
-						'"Yep, <<$pcs_nickname>>. If you like that sort of work, it might be worth getting a copy; you can skip one of them if you don''t like it too much." She pauses, then continues. "You know, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I sometimes go to the community center library on non-school days at lunchtime. So if you fancy meeting me there sometime, that''d be great."'
-						'Just then, the bell sounds, so you both head to the next class, still chatting.'				
+						'"Yes. If you like that sort of thing, then it might be worth getting a copy; you can skip one of them if you don''t like it too much." She pauses, then continues. "I sometimes go to the community center library on non-school days at lunchtime. If you fancy meeting me there sometime, that''d be great."'
+						'The bell then sounds, so you both head to the next class while still chatting.'				
 					end
 				end
 			end

locations/gschool_post_shower.qsrc

@@ -15,7 +15,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/locker/peekdress' + rand(1,2) + '.jpg"></center>'
-		'You let your eyes wander around the room, checking out the other girls in your class. Some are almost finished getting dressed, a few are in their underwear and a few are still naked. It''s a nice view, one thing you''ll always appreciate about gym class.'
+		'You let your eyes wander around the room, checking out the other girls in your class. Some are almost finished dressing, a few are in their underwear and a few are still naked. It''s a nice view, one thing you''ll always appreciate about gym class.'
 		gs'arousal','erotic_nudity', 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Get dressed':gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'gschool_lessons4', 'dress'
@@ -593,15 +593,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower':
 				sveta_dyke_rumor += 1
 				if rand (1,4) = 1:
 					if fame['pav_slut'] >= 175:
-						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she gives you an icy glare and turns away covering herself up as best she can. You''re embarrassed that you got caught but are glad that she didn''t say anything as that would have been awkward for you. You turn away and finish dressing yourself before leaving.'
+						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room, she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she gives you an icy glare and turns away while covering herself up as best she can. You''re embarrassed that you got caught but are glad that she didn''t say anything. You turn away and finish dressing yourself before leaving.'
 					elseif grupTipe = 5:
-						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she glares at you and is obviously unhappy that you were staring at her so she turns away covering herself up as best she can. You''re embarrassed at your actions and thankful that she didn''t say anything as that wouldn''t have helped in your efforts to make friends with your classmates. You turn away and finish dressing yourself before leaving.'
+						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room, she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she glares at you, clearly unhappy that you were staring at her as she turns away covering herself up as best she can. You''re embarrassed at your actions, but are thankful that she didn''t say anything. You turn away and finish dressing yourself before leaving.'
 					elseif npc_rel['A240'] >= 60:
-						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she gives you a fleeting shy smile then immediately blushes but quickly winks at you before turning away a little embarrassed by your actions and probably at her own reaction as well. You smile inwardly and are glad that she didn''t say anything as that would have been awkward for you. as you finish getting dressed before leaving.'
+						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room, she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she gives you a fleeting shy smile and blushes, but quickly winks at you before turning away, probably embarrassed at her own reaction as well. You smile inwardly and are glad that she didn''t say anything as you finish getting dressed before leaving.'
 					elseif npc_rel['A240'] <= 20:
-						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she gives you an icy glare and turns away covering herself up as best she can. For a moment it looked as though she''d call you out but for some reason she didn''t. You''re thankful for that as it was embarrassing enough that you got caught without her adding to it! You turn away and finish dressing yourself before leaving.'
+						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room, she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she gives you an icy glare and turns away while covering herself up as best she can; it looked as though she was about to call you out, but chose not to for some reason. You''re thankful for that as it was embarrassing enough that you got caught. You turn away and finish dressing yourself before leaving.'
 					else
-						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she shakes her head and is obviously disappointed in you then turns away and continuers dressing. You''re embarrassed that you got caught and turn away before you cause her any further discomfort and finish dressing yourself before leaving.'
+						'After finishing her shower and returning to the changing room, she opens her locker and starts getting dressed when she seems to realize someone is looking at her and suddenly turns and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she shakes her head in disappointment before she turns away and continues dressing. You''re embarrassed that you got caught and turn away to finish dressing yourself before leaving.'
 					end
 					gs'arousal','erotic_nudity', 3
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -897,7 +897,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower2':
 	$menu_arg = 'post_shower2'
 	menu_off = 0
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/gym/shower/postphyssho' + rand(1,7) + '.jpg"></center>'
-	'You let your eyes wander around the room, checking out the other girls in your class. They are chatting as they shower, some are getting close to done showering while a couple of others wander in to begin showering. It''s a nice view, one thing you''ll always appreciate about gym class.'
+	'You let your eyes wander around the room, checking out the other girls as they chat and shower. It''s a nice view, one thing you''ll always appreciate about gym class.'
 	act 'Go to the locker room':gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'gschool_lessons4','dress'
 	act 'Check out Albina':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -1469,15 +1469,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'post_shower2':
 			cla
 			if rand (1,4) = 1:
 				if fame['pav_slut'] >= 175:
-					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she glares at you as she turns away covering herself up as best she can. You''re a little embarrassed that you got caught but are glad that she didn''t say anything as that would have been awkward for you. You turn away and finish your shower before leaving.'
+					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she glares at you as she turns away while covering herself up as best she can. You''re a little embarrassed that you got caught, but are glad that she didn''t say anything. You turn away and finish your shower before leaving.'
 				elseif grupTipe = 5:
-					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she immediately turns away covering herself up as best she can. You''re embarrassed that she caught you but glad she didn''t say anything as that wouldn''t have helped you in your efforts to make friends with your classmates. You turn away and finish your shower before leaving.'
+					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she immediately turns away while covering herself up as best she can. You''re embarrassed that she caught you but glad she didn''t say anything. You turn away and finish your shower before leaving.'
 				elseif npc_rel['A240'] >= 60:
-					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she smiles shyly and blushes then winks at you before turning away clearly somewhat embarrassed. You smile inwardly but are glad that she didn''t say anything as that would have been awkward while finishing your shower and leaving.'
+					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she smiles shyly and blushes before winking at you and turning away, clearly somewhat embarrassed. You smile inwardly but are glad that she didn''t say anything as you finish your shower and leave.'
 				elseif npc_rel['A240'] <= 20:
-					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she glares at you giving you an icy look before immediately turning away covering herself up as best she can. You''re embarrassed that she caught you and you feel that you need to respect her privacy going forward. You turn away and finish your shower before leaving.'
+					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she gives you an icy look before immediately turning away while covering herself up as best she can. You''re embarrassed that she caught you as you turn away and finish your shower before leaving.'
 				else
-					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she turns away covering herself up as best she can. You feel that your actions have caused embarrassment for both of you. You turn away and finish your shower before leaving.'
+					'She seems to be enjoying her shower when she suddenly stops and looks in your direction. Seeing you looking at her, she turns away while covering herself up as best she can. You feel that your actions have caused embarrassment for both of you as you turn away and finish your shower before leaving.'
 				end
 				gs'arousal','erotic_nudity', 3
 				gs 'stat'

locations/natalia_pavlova.qsrc

@@ -3,57 +3,58 @@
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'first_chat':
 	nataliaQW['introduction'] = 1
-	if grupTipe = 4:
-		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she looks at you with a worried expression.'
-		'You slow your approach and smile at her. "Hi Natalia, you''re new here, so I wanted to say hello. I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-		'Natalia looks at you and responds in a quiet voice, "Umm... Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. I thought you were one of the Gopnik, so I''m not sure why you''d want to speak to me?"'
-		'You decide to reassure her, so you smile and reply, "Look, I''m not here to cause trouble. Yes, I''m one of the Gopnik, but we''re not all bad, you know."'
-		'"Okay. Yes, sorry about that. I didn''t mean to offend you. I was just a little surprised, is all."'
-		'You giggle. "Actually, I get that, and I''m not offended. Anyway, hello and welcome to our school. Maybe we''ll chat again at some point."'
-		'"Yes, I''d like that", Natalia answers. "See you later, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-	elseif grupTipe = 1:
-		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you and smiles.'
-		'You smile back at her. "Hi Natalia, you''re new here, so I thought I''d come and say hello. I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-		'Natalia looks at you and responds in a quiet voice, "Umm... Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. I thought you were one of the cool kids, so I''m surprised you''re here."'
-		'You smile and reply, "Well, I just thought I''d be friendly and welcome you to our school."'
-		'"Thank you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I was surprised, that is all. So please don''t take offence."'
-		'You giggle. "Don''t worry I''m not offended and I get it, a new school is daunting. Maybe we''ll chat again at some point."'
-		'"Yes, I''d like that", Natalia answers. "See you later,  <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+	if grupTipe = 1:
+		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. When she notices you, she glances up and smiles.'
+		'You smile back at her. "Hey Natalia. I thought I''d come and say hello. I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'She just stares at you. "Umm... Hi? Sorry, I thought you were one of the ''cool kids'', so I''m just surprised that you''re here."'
+		'You smile. "I just thought I''d be friendly and welcome you to our school."'
+		'"Oh. Thank you, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'You smile. "Don''t worry, I get it. A new school is daunting. Maybe we''ll chat again at some point?"'
+		'"Yes, I''d like that," she answers. "See you later, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 	elseif grupTipe = 2:
-		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you and smiles.'
-		'You smile back at her. "Hi Natalia, you''re new here, so I thought I''d come and say hello. I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-		'Natalia looks at you and responds in a quiet voice, "Umm... Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. I thought you were one of the sporty kids, so I''m a little surprised you''re here."'
-		'You smile and reply, "Well, I just thought I''d be friendly and welcome you to our school."'
-		'"Thank you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I was surprised, that is all. Please don''t take offence."'
-		'You giggle. "Don''t worry, I''m not offended, and I get it. A new school is daunting. Maybe we''ll chat again at some point."'
-		'"Yes, I''d like that", Natalia answers. "See you later, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. When she notices you, she glances up and smiles.'
+		'You smile back at her. "Hey Natalia. I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'She just stares at you. "Umm... Hi? Sorry, I thought you were one of the sporty kids, so I''m just surprised you''re here."'
+		'You smile. "I thought I''d be friendly and welcome you to our school."'
+		'"Oh. Thank you, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'You smile. "Don''t worry, I get it. A new school is daunting. Maybe we''ll chat again at some point?"'
+		'"Yes, I''d like that," she answers. "See you later, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
-		'You see Natalia sitting with the other nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you and smiles.'
-		'You smile back at her. "Hi Natalia, you''re new here, so I wanted to say hello. I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-		'Natalia looks at you and responds in a quiet voice, "Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Thank you for taking the time. It''s nice to speak to you."'
-		'You smile and reply, "Well, I just thought I''d be friendly and welcome you to our school."'
-		'"Thank you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I''m just a little overwhelmed getting to know loads of new people and a different environment. It''s a bit daunting."'
-		'You giggle. "Don''t worry, and yes, a new school is daunting. Maybe we''ll chat again soon. Can I ask you something, please?."'
-		'"Yes of course, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-		'"Well, Natalia, you don''t go to the game nights, so I just wondered why."'
-		'"Ah, right... Not really my scene. I prefer my books, and I also want to focus on my studies, so it doesn''t allow for many distractions."'
-		'"Oh, okay, Natalia, I just wondered. So let''s chat about what you like to read at some point."'
-		'"Yes, I''d like that, <<$pcs_nickname>>", Natalia answers, smiling at you.'
-		'"Okay, See you later, Natalia. I think it''s time for class."'
+		'You see Natalia sitting with the other nerds, reading a book. When she notices you, she glances up and smiles.'
+		'You smile back at her. "Hey Natalia. I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. It''s nice to meet you," she replies in a quiet voice.'
+		'You smile. "I just thought I''d be friendly."'
+		'"Thanks, I''m just a little overwhelmed getting to know loads of new people and a different environment. It''s a bit daunting."'
+		'You smile. "Don''t worry. Maybe we''ll chat again soon, but before I go; Can I ask you something?"'
+		'"Of course," she replies with a smile.'
+		'"You don''t go to the game nights. I just wondered why?"'
+		'"Ah, right. Not really my scene. I prefer my books, and I also want to focus on my studies, which doesn''t allow for many distractions."'
+		'"Oh, okay. I''d like to chat about what you like to read at some point."'
+		'"Yes, I''d like that," she answers while smiling at you.'
+		'"Okay, see you later. I think it''s time for class."'
+	elseif grupTipe = 4:
+		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. When she notices you, she glances up with a worried expression.'
+		'You smile at her. "Hey Natalia. I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'She just stares at you. "Umm... Hi? Sorry, I thought you were one of the gopniks, so I''m not sure why you''d want to speak to me?"'
+		'You decide to reassure her. "I''m not here to cause trouble. We''re not all bad, you know."'
+		'"I didn''t mean to offend you, I was just a little surprised is all."'
+		'You smile. "I get that. Anyway, hello and welcome to our school. Maybe we''ll chat again at some point?"'
+		'"Yes, I''d like that," she answers. "See you later, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+	
 	elseif grupTipe = 5 and fame['slut'] < 175:
-		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you.'
-		'As you approach, you smile at Natalia and say, "Hi, I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-		'Natalia turns to you, "Umm... Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. What brings you here?"'
-		'"I wanted to welcome you to the school is all." You reply'
-		'"Thank you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. That''s nice of you." She replies with a smile. "However, I''d like to get to the end of this chapter before class." She then looks away from you and continues reading her book.'
-		'You turn away and wait for the next class to begin thinking she seems nice. At least she was polite and reasonably friendly, unlike many of your classmates.'
+		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. When she notices you, she glances up at you.'
+		'You smile. "Hi, I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'Natalia turns to you. "Umm... Hi? What brings you here?"'
+		'"I wanted to welcome you to the school is all," you reply'
+		'"That''s nice of you," she replies with a smile. "However, I''d like to get to the end of this chapter before class." She returns to reading her book without waiting for your reply.'
+		'You turn away and wait for the next class to start, thinking she seems nice. At least she was reasonably friendly, unlike many of your classmates.'
 	else
-		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book as you approach her. As Natalia notices you, she glances up at you.'
-		'As you approach, you smile at Natalia and say, "Hi, I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-		'Natalia turns to you, "Umm... Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. What brings you here?"'
-		'"I wanted to welcome you to the school, is all." You reply.'
-		'"Thank you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. That''s nice of you." She replies with a smile. "However, I can''t be seen to get associated with you, given your reputation. It''s difficult enough for me as it is. I''d like to get to the end of this chapter before class." She then looks away from you and continues reading her book.'
-		'You turn away and wait for the next class to begin thinking she seems nice and isn''t rude to you. At least she was polite and reasonably friendly compared to many of your classmates.'
+		'You see Natalia sitting with the nerds, reading a book. When she notices you, she glances up at you.'
+		'You smile. "Hi, I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'Natalia turns to you. "Umm... Hi? What brings you here?"'
+		'"I wanted to welcome you to the school is all," you reply.'
+		'"That''s nice of you," she replies with a smile. "However, I can''t be seen associating with you, given your reputation. It''s difficult enough for me as it is. If you''ll excuse men, I''d like to get to the end of this chapter before class." She returns to reading her book without waiting for your reply.'
+		'You turn away and wait for the next class to start, thinking she seems nice. At least she was reasonably friendly compared to many of your classmates.'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -65,82 +66,80 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'library':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big240.jpg"></center>'
 	if npc_rel['A240'] < 60:
-		'You spot Natalia in the library, walk over to her, and greet her. "Hi Natalia, how are you?" You say in a quiet voice.'
-		'"I''m fine, <<$pcs_nickname>>, thanks and you?"'
-		'"Mustn''t grumble." You answer.'
+		'You spot Natalia in the library, so you walk over and greet her. "Hey Natalia, how are you?" you ask in a quiet voice.'
+		'"I''m fine, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You?"'
+		'"Mustn''t grumble," you answer.'
 		'You spend a few minutes chatting about developments in school and some of the latest news.'
-		'After a brief pause, she leans in close to you. "Look, <<$pcs_nickname>>, please don''t take this the wrong way, but... Umm..." She stops and blushes..'
-		'You are somewhat puzzled by her behaviour and ask her about it. "Sorry, Natalia, I have no clue what you''re talking about. Do you want to start again?"'
-		'She looks at you and reaches a decision. "Sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>, it was a silly idea. Please just forget it."'
-		'Still confused, you reply. "Oh, okay, Natalia, consider it forgotten. As I said, there is nothing to forget, really, as I didn''t catch what you wanted anyway. Okay, see you later."'
+		'After a brief pause, she leans in close to you. "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, please don''t take this the wrong way, but... Umm..." She stops and blushes.'
+		'You''re somewhat puzzled by her behaviour. "Sorry Natalia, but I have no clue what you''re talking about. Do you want to start again?"'
+		'She looks at you and reaches a decision. "Sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>>, it was a silly idea. Please just forget about it."'
+		'"Oh. Okay. See you later."'
 		act 'Go back to the library': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	else
 		if nataliaQW['sex_agree'] = 0:
-			'You spot Natalia in the library, walk over to her, and greet her. "Hi Natalia, how are you?" You say in a quiet voice.'
-			'"I''m fine, <<$pcs_nickname>>, thanks and you?"'
-			'"Mustn''t grumble." You answer.'
+			'You spot Natalia in the library, so you walk over and greet her. "Hey Natalia, how are you?" you ask in a quiet voice.'
+			'"I''m fine, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You?"'
+			'"Mustn''t grumble," you answer.'
 			'You spend a few minutes chatting about developments in school and some of the latest news then she leans close to you. "Look, <<$pcs_nickname>>, please don''t take this the wrong way, but... Umm..." She stops and blushes.'
-			'You are somewhat puzzled by her behaviour and ask her about it. "Come on Natalia, I think we''re good friends aren''t we? What is it?"'
-			'She looks embarrassed but replies. "Okay, Sveta, but this must stay our secret. So how to put this... Okay, here goes. Well, I''m very focused on my studies and can''t have any distractions, but sometimes I just need a bit of relief; do you know what I mean?"'
-			'You look at her, still puzzled, and suddenly realise what she means. "Oh... Oh! Okay, I get it, Natalia. Sorry not quick on the uptake today... Yes, I get what you''re saying and yes, I guess that''s one of the disadvantages of being our age, but it can be nice too." You reply and wink at her. "So what do you mean by what you said?"'
-			'"Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, we could help each other and enjoy some light relaxation together. Nothing serious, though, as my studies come first, so I can''t afford the distraction of a serious relationship."'
+			'You''re somewhat puzzled by her behaviour. "Come on Nat, we''re friends, aren''t we? What is it?"'
+			'She looks embarrassed as she replies. "Okay, but this must stay our secret. So how to put this... Well, I''m very focused on my studies and can''t have any distractions, but sometimes I just need a bit of... ''relief'', if you know what I mean?"'
+			'You look at her as you realise what she means. "Oh... Oh! I guess that''s one of the disadvantages of being our age, but it can be nice too," you reply and wink at her. "So what do you mean?"'
+			'"Well... we could help each other? Nothing serious though, as my studies come first. I can''t afford the distraction of a serious relationship."'
 			act 'No':
 				cla
 				nataliaQW['sex_agree'] = -1
-				'"I''m sorry, Natalia, you''re my friend, and I value that, but that''s not something I''d want to get into now. Maybe another time."'
-				'"Okay, <<$pcs_nickname>>, no problem, and if you change your mind, just let me know. Sorry if I embarrassed you."'
-				'"That''s cool, Natalia and no, of course, you didn''t embarrass me. You''re my friend, and that''s unchanged." You smile at her and wave goodbye.'
+				'"I''m sorry, but you''re my friend and I value that. This isn''t something I''d want to get into now. Maybe another time."'
+				'"Okay, <<$pcs_nickname>>, no problem. If you change your mind, just let me know. Sorry if I embarrassed you."'
+				'"Of course. You''re my friend, and that''s unchanged." You smile at her and wave goodbye.'
 				act 'Go back to the library': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 			act 'Yes':			
 				cla
 				nataliaQW['sex_agree'] = 1
-				'"You know what, Natalia, that would be great. I know that must have been difficult to ask, so thank you for confiding in me. You''re a good friend." You smile at her and make to leave.'
+				'"You know what, that would be great. I know that must have been difficult to ask, so thanks for confiding in me," you smile at her before leaving.'
 				act 'Go back to the library': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 		elseif nataliaQW['sex_agree'] = -1 or nataliaQW['library_sex_day'] = daystart:
-			'You spot Natalia in the library, walk over to her, and greet her. "Hi Natalia, how are you?" You say in a quiet voice.'
-			'"I''m fine, <<$pcs_nickname>>, thanks and you?"'
-			'"Mustn''t grumble." You answer.'
+			'You spot Natalia in the library, so you walk over and greet her. "Hey Natalia, how are you?" you ask in a quiet voice.'
+			'"I''m fine, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You?"'
+			'"Mustn''t grumble," you answer.'
 			'You spend a few minutes chatting about developments in school and some of the latest news.'
 			act 'Go back to the library': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			if nataliaQW['sex_agree'] = -1:
-				act 'Tell her that you are ready for a sexual relationship':
+				act 'Tell her that you''re ready for a sexual relationship':
 					nataliaQW['sex_agree'] = 1
 					cla
-					'After your friendly catch up you prod Natalia in the arm to get her attention.'
-					'When she turns to you, you lean in very close to her and with a sheepish look and nervously wisper. "Erm... Natalia, I''ve been thinking on yuor earlier suggestion." You pause to gather yourself as you realise your face is getting redder and redder. You nervously clear your throat and continue. "Well I''ve thought about it and yes that would be great Natalia although I''d understand if..."'
-					'Clearly realising you''re finding this difficult she cuts you off to save you further embarasement. "It''s okay <<$pcs_nickname>> I understand and yes that''s fine. I''ll look forward to it." She pauses before continuing. "I can''t now as I''ve got to go but maybe next time, guess we''ll see." She gives you a quick hug before getting up and leaving.'
+					'After your friendly catch up, you prod Natalia in the arm to get her attention.'
+					'When she turns to you, you lean in very close to her. "Erm... I''ve been thinking about your earlier suggestion..." You pause to gather yourself as you realise your face is getting redder and redder. You nervously clear your throat and continue. "Well I''ve thought about it, and yes that would be great. Although I''d understand if..."'
+					'Clearly realising you''re finding this difficult, she cuts you off to save you further embarasement. "It''s okay, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I understand. I''ll look forward to it." She pauses before continuing. "I can''t now, but maybe next time?" She gives you a quick hug before getting up and leaving.'
 					act 'Go back to the library': gt $loc, $loc_arg				
 				end
 			end
 		else
-			'You spot Natalia in the library, walk over to her, and greet her. "Hi Natalia, how are you?" You say in a quiet voice.'
-			'"I''m fine, <<$pcs_nickname>>, thanks and you?"'
-			'"Mustn''t grumble." You answer.'
-			'You spend a few minutes chatting about developments in school and some of the latest news then she leans close to you. "Look, <<$pcs_nickname>>, you remember our conversation about helping each other out?" She asks.'
-			'You nod to confirm that you do.'
-			'"So <<$pcs_nickname>>, I know a spare room here that''s never used, shall we?"'
+			'You spot Natalia in the library, so you walk over and greet her. "Hey Natalia, how are you?" you ask in a quiet voice.'
+			'"I''m fine, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You?"'
+			'"Mustn''t grumble," you answer.'
+			'You spend a few minutes chatting about developments in school and some of the latest news before she leans close to you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>... You remember our conversation about ''helping'' each other out?" she asks.'
+			'You nod.'
+			'"So... There''s a spare room here that''s never used. Shall we?"'
 			act 'No':
 				cla
-				'"Sorry, Natalia, I''m not in the mood now, and I have to get going. But I wanted to say hi before heading off."'
-				'"No problem, <<$pcs_nickname>>. See you soon." She replies.'
+				'"Sorry, but I''m not in the mood now, and I have to get going. I just wanted to say hi before heading off."'
+				'"No problem. See you soon," she replies.'
 				act 'Go back to the library': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
-			act 'Oh yes!':
+			act 'Yes':
 				*clr & cla
 				nataliaQW['library_sex_day'] = daystart
 				gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 3, 'lesbian'
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/kiss1.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'"Oh yes, Natalia, let''s go!" You say.'
-				'Natalia looks around and whispers to you, "Come on, <<$pcs_nickname>>, follow me."'
-				'You both quickly leave the library and enter a small bathroom. Then, pushing a cabinet under the handle, she effectively locks the door.'
-				'Natalia reaches over to you, brings her face close to you, and gives you a passionate kiss.'
-				'"Okay, <<$pcs_nickname>>, clothes off... Now!"'
-				'You giggle. "Desperate are you... or just practicing to be a dominatrix?"'
-				'Natalia laughs and replies "The former I guess... So what are you waiting for?!"'
-				'"Right, well, you too, then. Guess I''d better see to your needs first, seeing as you''re so desperate!" You reply.'
-				'"Umm... Now you''re talking <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+				'You silently nod before Natalia looks around. "Come on, <<$pcs_nickname>>, follow me," she whispers.'
+				'You both quickly leave the library and enter a small bathroom. Pushing a cabinet under the handle, she effectively locks the door before she gives you a passionate kiss.'
+				'"Okay <<$pcs_nickname>>, clothes off... Now!"'
+				'You giggle. "Desperate, or just practicing to be a dominatrix?"'
+				'She laughs. "The former, I guess... So what are you waiting for?!"'
+				'"Right. Well, you too then. Guess I''d better see to your needs first, seeing as you''re so desperate!" you reply.'
+				'"Now you''re talking!" she laughs.'
 				act 'Get busy':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'arousal', 'foreplay_give', 3, 'lesbian'
@@ -153,39 +152,36 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'library':
 						gs 'arousal', 'foreplay_give', 3, 'lesbian'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/giving/3.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'"Right, Natalia, lie back and let me get to work on you."'
-						'Natalia lies back on the bath, and you slowly kiss your way down her body to her pussy.'
+						'"Just lie back and let me get to work on you."'
+						'Natalia lies back and you slowly kiss your way down her body to her pussy.'
 						act 'Continue':
 							*clr & cla
 							gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 3, 'lesbian'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/giving/4.mp4"></video></center>'
-							'Natalia starts moaning as you continue.'
-							'You soon feel her pushing you back. "Let me sit up." She pants.'
+							'Natalia starts moaning as you continue and you soon feel her pushing you back. "Let me sit up," she pants.'
 							'Once she''s sat up, you get back to work, flicking your tongue in and out whilst sucking at her clit.'
 							act 'Getting her off':
 								*clr & cla
 								gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 3, 'lesbian'
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/giving/5.mp4"></video></center>'
-								'Soon her body starts to shake, and she lies down again, unable to sit up as she nears the point of no return.'
-								'You redouble your efforts as she starts to shake and moan softly.'
-								'Suddenly she quivers and lets out a gasp as she reaches her peak and squirts cum into your mouth.'
+								'Her body soon starts to shake, and she lies down again, unable to sit up as she nears the point of no return.'
+								'You redouble your efforts as she starts to shake and moan softly before she suddenly quivers and lets out a gasp as she reaches her peak and squirts into your mouth.'
 								act 'Ending kiss':
 									*clr & cla
 									gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 3, 'lesbian'
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/giving/6.mp4"></video></center>'
-									'After sucking her dry, you slowly work your way up her body to her lips and kiss her.'
-									'It''s a long sensual kiss, and she sucks up her juices from around your mouth.'
-									'You slowly pull apart, and she smiles at you. "Fuck <<$pcs_nickname>>, you dyke! You''re too good at that!"'
-									'Well, my turn now, and you know the required standard. So, you say, smiling at her.'
+									'After sucking her dry, you slowly work your way up her body to her lips and kiss her. It''s a long sensual kiss, and she sucks up her juices from around your mouth.'
+									'You then slowly pull apart, and she smiles at you. "Fuck <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re too good at that!"'
+									'"My turn now, and you know the required standard," you say while smiling at her.'
 									act 'Boobs':
 										*clr & cla
 										gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'lesbian'
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/receiving/2.mp4"></video></center>'
-										'You both slowly stand as the bath fills with water, and Natalia looks at you lustfully, gives you a kiss, and then moves down to your boobs.'
+										'You both slowly stand as the bath fills with water, and Natalia looks at you lustfully as she gives you a kiss before moving down to your breasts.'
 										'She starts kissing them and playing with your nipple as you bite your lip.'
 										act 'Sit down':
 											*clr & cla
@@ -193,43 +189,40 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'library':
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/receiving/3.mp4"></video></center>'
 											'Sitting on the bath corner, you spread your legs to allow Natalia to work on your pussy.'
-											'Breathing heavily, you grab the shelf to your left to keep your balance.'
-											'Natalia begins softly licking your pussy, quickening her pace before slowing again.'
+											'She starts softly licking your pussy, quickening her pace before slowing again.'
 											act 'Teasing':
 												*clr & cla
 												gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 3, 'lesbian'
 												gs 'stat'
 												'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/receiving/4.mp4"></video></center>'
 												'Natalia continues to tease, and your breathing starts to get shallow, enjoying her touch.'
-												'Her tongue flicks in an out of you as she fingers your arse, your excitement building all the while!'
+												'Her tongue flicks in and out of you as she fingers your ass, your excitement slowly building.'
 												act 'Bliss':
 													*clr & cla
 													$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 													gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 3, 'lesbian', 'no_orgasm_msg'
 													gs 'stat'
 													'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/receiving/5.mp4"></video></center>'
-													'It doesn''t take long for you to reach the edge as her tongue licks you and flicks in an out of your soaked pussy.'
-													'You suddenly moan louder than you intended as your shake and spasm as you reach the moment of utter bliss.'
+													'It doesn''t take long for you to reach the edge as her tongue licks you and flicks in and out of your soaked pussy.'
+													'You suddenly moan louder than you intended as you shake and spasm as you reach the moment of utter bliss.'
 													act 'Sensual kiss':
 														*clr & cla
 														gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 3, 'lesbian'
 														gs 'stat'
 														'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/receiving/6.mp4"></video></center>'
-														'You slowly come down from your high as Natalia leans back in the bath and smiles. "So, <<$pcs_nickname>>, how did I do?"'
-														'You climb on top of her and give her a long soft passionate kiss. "Does that answer your question? Umm, and you called me a dyke! Guess it takes one to know one!" You say, winking at her.'
-														'"Yeah, maybe." She replies, smiling at you.'
+														'You slowly come down from your high as Natalia leans back in the bath and smiles. "So? How did I do?"'
+														'You climb on top of her and give her a long, passionate kiss. "Does that answer your question?" you reply while winking at her.'
 														act 'Need a wash':
 															*clr & cla
 															gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'lesbian'
 															gs 'stat'
 															gs 'arousal', 'end'
 															'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/natalia/love/bathroom/receiving/1.mp4"></video></center>'
-															'"Okay, Natalia, we both need a good wash as we''re all sweaty and sticky... Again!"'
-															'"Let''s shower quickly and then be on our way before we get caught?"'
-															'"Umm, yeah, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Sounds good." She replies in a low lusty voice.'
+															'"We both need a good wash as we''re all sweaty and sticky... Again! Let''s shower quickly and then be on our way before we get caught?"'
+															'"Yeah, sounds good," she replies in a low, lusty voice.'
 															'You step into the bath, pour some gel on each other, and wash each down, occasionally pausing to enjoy each other''s bodies.'
-															'"Shit, not too much of that or we''ll have to go another round!" You say to Natalia.'
-															'"Yeah, you''re right, <<$pcs_nickname>>. This has been fun but let''s not push our luck."'
+															'"Shit, not too much of that or we''ll have to go another round!" you say to her.'
+															'"Yeah, you''re right. This has been fun, but let''s not push our luck."'
 															'You both quickly finish up, dry off and get dressed before leaving.'
 															act 'Go back to the library': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 														end