Merge branch 'master' of https://git.tfgames.site/Vengeance_11/glife

locations/albina_lazar_sex.qsrc

@@ -15,9 +15,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lazar_start':
 		if week = 3 or week = 6:
 			!! maid
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/albinahome/maid.jpg"></center>'
-			'You enter Albina''s house and the maid politely greets you. "Miss <<$pcs_firstname>>, how nice to see you. Miss Albina already has a guest, shall I tell them of your arrival?" 
-			You shake your head, knowing what Albina and her "guest" are doing upstairs. "No, it''s fine. She should be expecting me, so I''ll head up to her room if that''s okay?"
-			The maid just nods and continues with her duties, leaving you to walk up the stairs and stop to make your decision.'
+			'You enter Albina''s house and the maid politely greets you. "Miss <<$pcs_firstname>>, how nice to see you. Miss Albina already has a guest, shall I tell them of your arrival?"' 
+			'You shake your head, knowing what Albina and her "guest" are doing upstairs. "No, it''s fine. She should be expecting me, so I''ll head up to her room if that''s okay?"'
+			'The maid just nods and continues with her duties, leaving you to walk up the stairs and stop to make your decision.'
 			
 		else
 			!! mother
@@ -82,7 +82,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz1.jpg"></center>'				
 	'You glance around to make sure nobody is nearby, then crack the door open slightly to peek in. You can see Albina in her underwear, squatting in front of Lazar. She pulls his jeans down and his impressively sized and rock hard dick springs free.' 
-	'She starts licking and jerking it before she takes it into her mouth and down her throat, gagging as she deepthroats him as far as she can before pulling her head back up. She then starts bobbing her head up and down his shaft as she sucks his dick, occasionally taking him back down her throat and making him moan in pleasure as he grabs her head and holds her down as long as possible.'
+	'She starts licking and jerking it before she takes it into her mouth and starts bobbing her head up and down his shaft as she sucks his dick. After a few seconds of this, she gags as she takes it further into her mouth and down her throat, deepthroating him as far as she can before pulling her head back up and coughing. Lazar barely lets her breath before he shoves his dick back into her mouth, moaning in pleasure as he holds her down as long as possible.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Keep watching':
@@ -98,33 +98,33 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 		act 'Keep watching':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You see a glimpse of an aroused smile on Albina''s face as she wipes her face and slowly jerks his drool coated cock in her hands. "Okay, enough foreplay. I need this thing inside me <i>now</i>."' 
-			'He climbs on the bed and gets on his back as Albina crawls over to him. She straddles him and guides his cock into her slit before slowly lowering herself down, taking his full length into her pussy. She slowly rides him before he grabs her hips and starts slamming her up and down on his dick as they both grunt and moan in pleasure.' 
-			'"Fuck, your pussy is so damn tight!" he grunts and lets go of her. She giggles and starts riding him harder, her bubble butt loudly slapping against his thighs as she lets his hands roam all over her curvy body.'
+			'You catch a glimpse of an aroused grin on Albina''s face as she wipes her face and slowly jerks his drool coated cock in her hands. "Enough foreplay. I want you to fuck the shit out of me."' 
+			'He climbs on the bed and gets on his back as Albina crawls over to him. She straddles him and guides his cock into her slit before sliding down onto it, moaning as it stretches her pussy.' 
+			'"Fuck, I love it when you rearrange my guts like this!" she grunts and starts riding him hard, her bubble butt loudly slapping against his thighs as she lets his hands roam all over her curvy body.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Keep watching':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz4.jpg"></center>'
-				'He takes her by surprise when he grabs her by the hips and rolls her over onto her back, making her giggle. He then starts fucking her missionary style, causing her to moan loudly as she wraps her legs tightly around his back. He starts fucking her harder as a result and she wraps her arms around his neck, pulling him down and making out with him as he keeps thrusting in and out of her ever wetter hole.' 
-				'After a few minutes, they stop and she smiles at him. "You''ve teased my pussy enough. Give my ass a turn with that cock now." He pulls out of her and waits as she leans over and opens her nightstand, pulling out a bottle of lube and motioning for him to sit back on the bed.'
+				'After a few minutes Lazar grabs her by the hips and lifts her off his cock before dropping her on the bed. She spreads her legs and he climbs on top of her and starts fucking her missionary style, causing her to moan loudly as she wraps her legs tightly around his back. He starts fucking her harder as a result and she wraps her arms around his neck, pulling him down and making out with him as he keeps thrusting in and out of her ever wetter hole.' 
+				'After a few minutes, he climbs off her and flops down on his back as Albina brushes her hair back and sucks his dick for a few seconds before popping it out of her mouth. "Mmhhm, I love tasting my pussy on your dick, but it''s time to give my other hole a turn now..." Lazar grins as she leans over and opens her nightstand, pulling out a bottle of lube and popping the cap on it.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Keep watching':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz5.jpg"></center>'			
-					'You keep watching as she sits up on her knees and opens the bottle, squirts a plentiful amount of its contents onto her fingers and starts rubbing it into her asshole. When she feels she''s ready, she throws the bottle aside and Lazar squeezes her ass as she climbs back on top of him.' 
+					'You keep watching as she sits up on her knees and squirts a plentiful amount of its contents onto her fingers and starts rubbing it into her asshole. When she feels she''s ready, she throws the bottle aside and Lazar squeezes her ass as she climbs back on top of him.' 
 					'She moans softly in pleasure as his dick slowly penetrates her ass. Once it''s inside, she slowly starts riding him, gradually taking him deeper with each thrust as they both grunt and moan in pleasure. This continues for a few minutes until his dick suddenly slides out of her ass.' 
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Keep watching':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz6.jpg"></center>'
-						'Albina crawls down and takes his dick back into her mouth, sucking it for a few seconds before she gets on all fours and wiggles her ass at Lazar, who gets on his knees behind her and slides his dick back into her ass.'
-						'He''s rather slow with his thrusts, which annoys Albina. "You <i>finally</i> get me bent over and this is all you can do? Go harder! Spank me, pound my tight little ass and make me fucking cum!" He spanks her ass several times as he starts fucking her harder. She squeals in delight and tightly grips the sheets between her fingers before burying her head in them to muffle her loud cries of pleasure.'
+						'Albina crawls onto all fours and wiggles her ass at Lazar, who gets on his knees behind her and slides his dick back into her ass.'
+						'He''s rather slow with his thrusts, which annoys Albina. "Harder! I want you to pound my tight little ass and make me fucking cum!" He spanks her ass several times as he starts fucking her harder. She squeals in delight and tightly grips the sheets between her fingers before burying her head in them to muffle her loud cries of pleasure.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 						gs 'stat'
-						if rand(1,4) = 1:
+						if rand(0,4) = 0:
 							act 'Keep watching':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/cum5.mp4"></center>'
@@ -133,27 +133,49 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 								'Lazar grins. "Another round with that sweet pussy should do it."'
 								'Albina gets back on all fours. "Just don''t cum inside me, okay?"'
 								'Lazar pushes her down on her stomach and mounts her before he shoves his cock in her pussy and starts pounding her.'
-								'Albina looks back at him when he starts panting. "Pull out, you idiot!"'
-								'Lazar keeps thrusting until the last second when he pulls out and starts cumming over her lower back. He collapses on the bed when he''s finished.' 
+								'After a few seconds, Albina looks back at him when he starts panting. "Pull out! PULL OUT!"'
+								'He keeps thrusting until the last second when he pulls out and starts cumming over her lower back, collapsing on the bed when he''s finished.' 
 								gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Finished':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/after/cuddle1.jpg"></center>'
-									'Albina climbs on top of him and smacks him on the chest. "What have I told you about waiting until the last second to pull out?" she asks him with a hint of annoyance.'
-									'"Hey! I wasn''t going to cum inside you!" he replies before grinning and gently squeezing her ass in his hand. "Especially if it meant I couldn''t fuck this amazing ass anymore."'
-									'She smacks his hand away and glares at him before grabbing a pillow and hitting him with it. "It''s not funny Lazar! You know I don''t like being creampied!"'
-									'They continue arguing as you quickly close the door and hurry away before you''re spotted. You hide in the bathroom until you hear Lazar leaving the room and heading down the stairs. You then walk up to Albina''s door, deciding not to say anything about what you just saw.'
+									'Albina climbs on top of him and smacks him on the chest. "What have I told you about waiting until the last second to pull out?" she asks with a hint of annoyance before grabbing a pillow and hitting him with it. "You know I don''t like getting cum in my pussy!"'
+									'She continues berating him as you quickly hurry away before you''re spotted. You hide in the bathroom until you hear Lazar leaving the room and heading down the stairs. You then walk up to Albina''s door, deciding not to say anything about what you just saw.'
 									act 'Go to her room': gt 'albina_lazar_sex', 'go_to_bedroom1'
 								end
 						    end
-						else
+						elseif rand(0,4) = 1:
 							act 'Keep watching':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/facial0,3.mp4"></center>'
 								'Another few hard smacks on her now bright red ass is enough to send her over the edge and a powerful orgasm overwhelms her entirely. Lazar''s dick slides out of her ass as she falls forwards and shudders and pants on the bed, the sheets soaked with her juices.'
-								'Lazar continues jerking off as Albina recovers on the bed before saying he''s close. Albina quickly slides off the bed and onto her knees in front of him. He groans loudly as his cum starts splattering across Albina''s face. Once he''s finished, she looks up at him with a satisfied grin as his cum trickles down her face and drips from her chin.'
-								'"Damn, your pretty little face looks even better with my cum all over it!" he pants with a smile.'
+								'Lazar continues jerking off as Albina recovers on the bed before saying he''s close. Albina quickly slides off the bed and onto her knees in front of him and his cum starts splattering across her face.'
+								'He groans loudly in pleasure as he squeezes the last of his cum out onto her forehead before she takes his cock into her mouth and sucks it clean. "Damn, your pretty little face looks even better with my cum all over it!" he pants with a smile as she pops his cock out of her mouth and looks up at him with a satisfied grin as his cum trickles down her face and drips from her chin.'
+								gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
+								gs 'stat'
+								act 'Finished':
+									*clr & cla
+									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/after/cuddle1.jpg"></center>'
+									'Albina cleans herself up before crawling up to Lazar and snuggling into him. They sit quietly in each other''s embrace before Lazar gently kisses her forehead, gets up off the bed and gathers his clothes up. He starts getting dressed and you quickly close the door and hurry away before you''re spotted.'
+									'You wait on the top stairs until you hear the door open and walk up like you were just heading to the room. He looks a little surprised to see you, but smiles.'
+									'"Oh hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, Albina''s in her room if you''re looking for her. I need to get going, got to hit the gym today," he explains as he flexes and walks past you. "See you around."'
+									'With that, he walks down the stairs and you hear him bidding farewell to Zoya. You walk up to Albina''s door, deciding not to say anything about what you just saw.'
+									act 'Go to her room': gt 'albina_lazar_sex', 'go_to_bedroom'
+								end
+						    end
+						else
+							act 'Keep watching':
+								*clr & cla
+								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/analcreampie/cumanal1.mp4"></center>'
+								'Another few hard smacks on her now bright red ass is enough to send her over the edge and a powerful orgasm overwhelms her entirely. Lazar''s dick slides out of her ass as she falls forwards and shudders and pants on the bed, the sheets soaked with her juices.'
+								'Once she recovers, Albina sits up on the bed. "You must be close by now?"'
+								'"If I keep fucking that ass, then I''ll be done in no time," he replies before pulling her up next to him.'
+								'Albina giggles before Lazar shoves his cock back in her ass, causing her to moan loudly. "Yes, fuck my slutty asshole!"'
+								*nl
+								'He starts fucking her sideways for a few minutes before he starts panting. "Yes, cum in my tight little ass! Fill me with your cum!" Albina says as she looks back at him.'
+								'In response, he shoves his dick as far as he can up her ass before he starts pumping his cum into her, causing her to moan softly at the sensation.'
+								'Once he''s finished, he pulls out and his cum soon follows, flowing down Albina''s ass cheek and pooling on the bed beneath her as the two of them make out. "I love farting your cum out of my ass," she giggles between kisses before shoving her fingers up her ass. She fingers herself deep before pulling them out and sucking on them as Lazar grins.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Finished':
@@ -188,16 +210,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'join':
 	'It''s too much for you. You have to be part of this, so you walk in and close the door, startling the two of them before a puzzled Albina glares at you. "What the fuck, <<$pcs_nickname>>?! Can''t you knock?" she asks in a somewhat confused tone.'
 	if AlbinaQW['Lazar_Threesome'] = 1:
 		'"You guys sounded like you were having fun, so I thought I could join in as well?"'
-		'Lazar just grins widely. "Having another threesome with you babes? Fuck yeah, I''m down with that!" and Albina smiles in return. "If it''s anything like our last one, then I look forward to both of you making me cum again."'
+		'Lazar just grins widely. "Having another threesome with you babes? Fuck yeah, I''m down with that!"'
+		'Albina just shakes her head and grins at you.'
 	else
 		'"You guys sounded like you were having fun, so I thought I could join in as well?"'
-		'Lazar just grins widely. "Getting to fuck you two babes at the same time? Fuck yeah, I''m down for that. How about you?" he asks as he looks at Albina, who just shrugs in indifference. "Whatever. As long as you make me cum."'
+		'Lazar just grins widely. "Getting to fuck you two babes at the same time? Fuck yeah, I''m down for that. How about you?" he asks as he looks at Albina, who just shrugs with indifference.'
 	end
 	act 'Suck his cock':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/laz3some1.jpg"></center>'
 		'You strip naked as Albina sucks Lazar''s dick. Once you come over to join them, she pops his dick out of her mouth and offers it to you. You take it into your mouth and start sucking it while she licks and sucks his balls.' 
-		'You swap his cock back and forth between each other before she stops and pushes you onto the bed. She bends over and buries her head into your crotch as Lazar moves in behind her and slides his dick back into her pussy. He starts fucking her as she licks and sucks on your clit, her moans and piercing adding to your pleasure.'
+		'You swap his cock back and forth between each other before she stops and pushes you onto the bed. She bends over and buries her head into your crotch as Lazar moves in behind her and slides his dick back into her pussy. He starts fucking her as she licks and sucks on your clit, her moans and tongue piercing adding to your pleasure.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'group'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Get eaten out':
@@ -210,7 +233,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'join':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/laz3some3.jpg"></center>'
 				vaginal_slip = 8
-				'Albina climbs onto the bed as you spread your legs and Lazar slowly penetrates your pussy and starts fucking you. Albina watches him fuck you for a few minutes before she straddles you and sits right on your face, her soaking wet pussy dripping into your mouth. You start licking and sucking her pussy and clit and occassionaly tongue fuck her while she plays with your breasts, kneading them in her hands and squeezing your nipples. She soon starts rocking her hips over your face, smearing you with her sticky wetness as Lazar starts fucking you even harder, his balls deep thrusts bottoming out inside you.'  
+				'Albina climbs onto the bed as you spread your legs and Lazar slowly penetrates your pussy and starts fucking you. Albina watches him fuck you for a few minutes before she straddles you and sits on your face, her soaking wet pussy dripping into your mouth. You start licking and sucking her pussy and clit and occassionaly tongue fuck her while she plays with your breasts, kneading them in her hands and squeezing your nipples. She soon starts rocking her hips over your face, smearing you with her sticky wetness as Lazar starts fucking you even harder, his balls deep thrusts bottoming out inside you.'  
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'group'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Join in sucking his dick':

locations/albina_sex_chat.qsrc

@@ -8,7 +8,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex_talk_start':
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	else
 		'You steer the conversation towards sex, a topic Albina is more than comfortable with and readily engages with you about it.'
-	!!'You steer the conversation towards sex, a topic Albina is a girl who is comfortable about her sexuality and so you end up talking about sex.'
 		*nl
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk2'
 	end
@@ -40,37 +39,37 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob_talk1':
 	act'Talk about blowjobs':
 		cla
-		act'"Do you like blowjobs?"':
+		act '"Do you like blowjobs?"':
 			cla & *clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Do you like giving blowjobs?" you ask Albina. She twists her lips thoughtfully almost like she can''t make up her mind.'
-			'"I don''t really mind giving head, but it''s not my favorite," she says eventually. "It''s just foreplay to get the guy hard or a way to get them to finish. Although... when a guy grabs my hair, takes charge, and shoves it down my throat... <i>fuck me</i>... There''s something so hot about that. It''s actually made me cum once or twice before."'
-			act'"I don''t like blowjobs"':
+			'"Do you like giving blowjobs?" you ask Albina, who twists her lips thoughtfully, almost like she can''t make up her mind.'
+			'"I don''t really mind giving head, but it''s not my favorite," she says eventually. "It''s just foreplay to get the guy hard or a way to get them to finish. Although... when a guy grabs my hair, takes charge, and shoves it down my throat... <i>Fuck me</i>... There''s something so hot about that. It''s actually made me cum once or twice before."'
+			act '"I don''t like blowjobs"':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"Really? You''ve gotten off on a blowjob before?" You wrinkle your nose. "I hate blowjobs. The taste is awful, they make my jaw ache, and they''re just gross all around."'
 				'"I can understand that," Albina nods. "They''re not for everybody. I guess I''ve just seen so much cock I''m used to the taste. And just to be clear, it''s only in that specific situation that I like blowjobs."'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 			end
 			
-			act'"That''s hot"':
+			act '"That''s hot"':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"That''s fucking hot," you grin at her, causing her to grin back.'
 				'"Well? What about you? Do you like giving head?"'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'blowjob_talk2'
 			end
 			
-			act'Tease her':
+			act 'Tease her':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"You cum from blowjobs?" you snicker. "You slut."'
 				'"I <i>have</i> cum from <i>one or two</i> blowjobs before," she says, smacking you with a pillow before grinning back. "But what about you, huh? Do you like giving head?"'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'blowjob_talk2'
 			end
 			
-			act'"You''re just like my sister"':
+			act '"You''re just like my sister"':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"You''re just like my sister, you know that?" you snicker. Albina cocks her head, giving you a confused look. You pull up your hand and start counting off on your fingers.'
 				'"You love taking it up the ass, you love getting face fucked, you love swallowing-"'
-				'"I don''t love swallowing!" Albina interrupts you in protest. "I said I <i>always</i> swallow because I''m not an impolite bitch! There''s a difference!"'
+				'"I don''t love swallowing!" she interrupts in protest. "I said I <i>always</i> swallow because I''m not an impolite bitch! There''s a difference!"'
 				'"Suuuure!" You continue to tease her until she picks up a pillow and smacks you with it.'
 				'"Well what about you, huh?" she grins back. "Do you like giving head?"'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'blowjob_talk2'
@@ -82,7 +81,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob_talk1':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob_talk2':
-	act'You hate it':
+	act 'You hate it':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"I hate giving blowjobs," you say, wrinkling your nose. "The taste is awful, they make my jaw ache, and they''re just gross all around."'
@@ -90,23 +89,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob_talk2':
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'You don''t like it':
+	act 'You don''t like it':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-		'"I don''t really like it," you say, wrinkling your nose. "They''re not the <i>worst</i> but I don''t get off on them at all. I mostly just sit there bored out of my mind until it''s over."'
+		'"I don''t really like it," you say, wrinkling your nose. "They''re not the <i>worst</i>, but I don''t get off on them at all. I mostly just sit there bored out of my mind until it''s over."'
 		'"I get that," Albina nods. "If it''s not a skull-fucking, I feel pretty much the same way. Just something you have to do until you get to the good part."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'Don''t love it, don''t hate it':
+	act 'Don''t love it, don''t hate it':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Hmm. I don''t know. It''s okay I guess," you say with a shrug. "I don''t really like them, but I don''t really hate them either. Just kind of something I do. I don''t know. It''s a cock in my mouth. Is there much more to say?"'
+		'"Hmm. I don''t know. It''s okay, I guess..." you say with a shrug. "I don''t really like them, but I don''t really hate them either. Just kind of something I do. I don''t know. It''s a cock in my mouth. Is there much more to say?"'
 		'"I get that," Albina nods. "If it''s not a skull-fucking, I feel pretty much the same way. Just something you have to do until you get to the good part."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'You like it':
+	act 'You like it':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"I like it," you say. "Knowing that I''m in charge of a guy''s pleasure is really hot. I like the feeling of them squirming inside my mouth and knowing that it''s because of me."'
@@ -114,7 +113,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob_talk2':
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'You love it':
+	act 'You love it':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"I <i>love</i> blowjobs," you gush. "I love everything about them! The feel of a guy''s dick in my mouth, the taste, the smell, the way I can make him moan and squirm. I could get off on giving head."'
@@ -122,11 +121,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob_talk2':
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'Only when it''s rough':
+	act 'Only when it''s rough':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"I''m like you," you say. "When I''m blowing a guy, it''s just whatever. But when a guy starts getting rough with me-"'
-		'"It''s so fucking hot, right?" Albina interrupts.'
+		'"It''s so fucking hot, right?" she interrupts.'
 		'"It''s like a waterfall between my legs," you gush back excitedly. "It makes me want to just go limp and-"'
 		'"Let him grab you with both hands and skullfuck you?"'
 		'"Yes!"'
@@ -135,15 +134,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob_talk2':
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'Only if his dick is small':
+	act 'Only if his dick is small':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-		'"I like it..." you start. "But only when a guy''s dick is small enough. When it''s too big it takes so much effort just to get it around my teeth and I feel like I''m gonna choke. An aching jaw is kind of a turn off. But when it''s average or small and I can suck it no problem, blowjobs can be kinda fun."'
-		'"I get that," Albina nods. "Definitely choked on my share of big dicks. Almost threw up several times before I lost my gag reflex."'
+		'"I like it..." you start. "But only when a guy''s dick is small enough. When it''s too big, it takes so much effort just to get it in my mouth and I feel like I''m gonna choke. An aching jaw is kind of a turn off. But when it''s average or small and I can suck it no problem, blowjobs can be kinda fun."'
+		'"I get that," she nods. "Definitely choked on my share of big dicks. Almost threw up several times before I lost my gag reflex."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'Only if his dick is big':
+	act 'Only if his dick is big':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"I like it when it''s a big dick," you smirk. "There''s something really satisfying about having a big dick in my mouth, making me stretch my lips to get around it. It''s... <i>meaty</i>. As opposed to when it''s small or average, it feels like there''s too much space by comparison."'
@@ -172,9 +171,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '69_talk1':
 			if npc_sex['A23'] = 1:
 				'"It''s... different... When you- I mean we- It made me-"'
 				'Albina flushes, growing flustered in a way you rarely see from her.'
-				'"When we... <i>did that...</i> it was very... wet..." she says slowly. "Not sure I can describe it another way. Everything was soft and squishy and my pussy was like a waterfall and I wanted to drown myself in yours. Really different from 69ing with a guy. Or sex with guys as a whole."'
+				'"When we... <i>did that...</i> it was very... wet..." she says slowly. "Not sure I can describe it another way. Everything was soft and squishy, my pussy was like a waterfall and I wanted to drown myself in yours. Really different from 69ing with a guy. Or sex with guys as a whole."'
 			else
-				'"It''s very... wet..." she says slowly. Albina flushes, growing flustered in a way you rarely see from her. "Not sure I can describe it another way. Everything was soft and squishy and my pussy was like a waterfall and I wanted to drown myself in yours. Really different from 69ing with a guy. Or sex with guys as a whole."'
+				'"It''s very... wet..." she says slowly, growing flustered in a way you rarely see from her. "Not sure I can describe it another way. Everything was soft and squishy, my pussy was like a waterfall and I wanted to drown myself in yours. Really different from 69ing with a guy. Or sex with guys as a whole."'
 			end
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 		end
@@ -190,42 +189,42 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cum_talk1':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'cum_taste1':
-	act'Do you like the taste?':
+	act 'Do you like the taste?':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Do you like the taste of cum?" you ask Albina. She immediately wrinkles her nose.'
-		'"Ew. No." She makes a fake gagging sound. "It''s <i>vile</i>. I brush my teeth the first chance I get after I finish a guy with my mouth. Why? Do you like it?"'
+		'"Do you like the taste of cum?" you ask Albina, who immediately wrinkles her nose.'
+		'"Ew. No!" She makes a fake gagging sound. "It''s <i>vile</i>. I brush my teeth the first chance I get after I finish a guy with my mouth. Why? Do you like it?"'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'cum_taste2'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'cum_taste2':
-	act'It''s gross':
+	act 'It''s gross':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"No, I agree with you one hundred percent," you say, making a face of disgust yourself. "It''s bitter, it''s sour, it''s slimy. I want to throw up as soon as I taste it. It''s just... <i>ugh!</i>"'
 		'The two of you share an involuntary shudder. Seems you''re in agreement.'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'Don''t mind it':
+	act 'Don''t mind it':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"I don''t really mind it," you shrug. "It''s a little bitter, not my favourite flavour in the world, but not really a dealbreaker for me either."'
-		'"I don''t know how you can stand it," Albina shakes her head. "I''ve tasted dozens of different guy''s cum and they''re <i>all</i> awful. One of them claimed he ate pineapple just for me, but either he was lying or that stuff about making it taste sweeter is bullshit!"'
+		'"I don''t know how you can stand it," She shakes her head. "I''ve tasted dozens of different guy''s cum and they''re <i>all</i> awful. One of them claimed he ate pineapple just for me, but either he was lying or that stuff about making it taste sweeter is bullshit!"'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'You like it':
+	act 'I like it':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"I like it actually," you say. "It''s a little salty, but not offensively so. Like the white part of a fried egg. Similar texture too. I can swallow it no problem."'
-		'"I don''t know how you can stand it," Albina shakes her head. "I''ve tasted dozens of different guy''s cum and they''re <i>all</i> awful. One of them claimed he ate pineapple just for me, but either he was lying or that stuff about making it taste sweeter is bullshit!"'
+		'"I don''t know how you can stand it," She shakes her head. "I''ve tasted dozens of different guy''s cum and they''re <i>all</i> awful. One of them claimed he ate pineapple just for me, but either he was lying or that stuff about making it taste sweeter is bullshit!"'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
 	if pcs_traits['cumeater'] ! 0:
-		act'You got used to it':
+		act 'I got used to it':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"I just got used to it to be honest," you shrug. "Didn''t like it at first, but after swallowing a bunch of loads, it''s removed any disgust I associated with it."'
-			'"I don''t know how you can stand it," Albina shakes her head. "I''ve tasted dozens of different guy''s cum and they''re <i>all</i> awful. One of them claimed he ate pineapple just for me, but either he was lying or that stuff about making it taste sweeter is bullshit!"'
+			'"I don''t know how you can stand it," She shakes her head. "I''ve tasted dozens of different guy''s cum and they''re <i>all</i> awful. One of them claimed he ate pineapple just for me, but either he was lying or that stuff about making it taste sweeter is bullshit!"'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 		end
 	end
@@ -236,8 +235,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'facial_talk1':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"Do you like it when guys cum on your face?" you ask.'
-		'"Sometimes," Albina shrugs. "When a guy cums on my face, I feel <i>dirty</i>. Like a used cum rag. Which... I don''t mind if I''m in the mood for that kind of thing. Like when Lazar fucks me so hard my hair is frizzy and my makeup is fucked. That''s the perfect time for him to cum on my face. But that''s situational. I''d much rather he just blow his load in my ass. I''m always in the mood for that."'
-		'She grins at you.'
+		'"Sometimes," she shrugs. "When a guy cums on my face, I feel <i>dirty</i>. Like a used cum rag. Which... I don''t mind if I''m in the mood for that kind of thing. Like when Lazar fucks me so hard my hair is frizzy and my makeup is fucked. That''s the perfect time for him to cum on my face. But that''s situational. I''d much rather he just blow his load in my ass. I''m <i>always</i> in the mood for that..." she grins.'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 end
@@ -380,26 +378,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_fav':
 	cla & *clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 	'"I really like giving head," you admit.'
-	'"Ugh, <i>yes!</i>" Albina says, giving you a lustful look. "I love it when guys grab me by the hair and skullfuck me. What do you like about it?"'
-	act'I like being in control':
+	'"Ugh, <i>yes!</i>" she says while giving you a lustful look. "I love it when guys grab me by the hair and skullfuck me. What do you like about it?"'
+	act 'I like being in control':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"It makes me feel like I''m in charge," you grin, though Albina looks back at you confused.'
 		'"In charge?" she asks. "You''re on your knees serving someone else''s needs. What about it makes you feel like you''re in charge?"'
-		'"When a dick is in my mouth, it means I''m in control of all the pleasure," you say. "I can tease him, I can edge him, I can suck him dry, I can make him beg, I choose when to make him come. Plus, I''ve got teeth."'
-		'You flash Albina a wicked grin.'
-		'"When your cock is surrounded by my teeth, <i>I''m</i> the one in charge."'
+		'"When a dick is in my mouth, it means I''m in control of all the pleasure," you say. "I can tease him, I can edge him, I can suck him dry, I can make him beg, I choose when to make him cum. Plus, I''ve got teeth."'
+		'You flash Albina a wicked grin. "When your cock is surrounded by my teeth, <i>I''m</i> the one in charge."'
 		'"Huh. Never thought of it like that..." she smirks back. "Still, can''t do anything about it when they cum in your mouth. I''d rather they just bend me over and blast my ass."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'spit_or_swallow'
 	end
 	
-	act'I like being subservient':
+	act 'I like being subservient':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"I think I''m just a bit of a sub," you shrug. "I like being on my knees, with his hand on my head, moving me up and down his cock."'
 		'"You''re <i>such</i> a goodie two shoes," Albina teases.'
 		'"... I like it when he calls me a good girl too," you admit and she gives a sharp bark of laughter.'
 		'"I bet. But don''t you ever get tired of swallowing?"'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'spit_or_swallow'
-		act'Good girls swallow':
+		act 'Good girls swallow':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"No," you reply without hesitation. "I''m a good girl. And good girls always swallow."'
 			'"Doesn''t mean you always like it," she says, twisting her mouth wistfully.'
@@ -407,34 +404,33 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_fav':
 		end
 	end
 	
-	act'I like pleasing people':
+	act 'I like pleasing people':
 		cla & *nl
-		'"I like pleasing people," you shrug. "I love hearing a guy moan while I''m blowing him. It makes me feel so hot and sexy. And when he throbs in my mouth-" You stop, shivering at the thought and grin at Albina. "I could just come thinking about it."'
-		'She smirks back at you.'
-		'"I bet. But don''t you ever get tired of swallowing?"'
+		'"I like pleasing people," you shrug. "I love hearing a guy moan while I''m blowing him. It makes me feel so hot and sexy. And when he throbs in my mouth-" You stop, shivering at the thought and grin at Albina. "I could cum just thinking about it."'
+		'She smirks back at you. "I bet. But don''t you ever get tired of swallowing?"'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'spit_or_swallow'
 	end
 	
-	act'Oral fixation':
+	act 'Oral fixation':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"I think I have some kind of oral fixation," you say. "The feeling of a cock in my mouth just turns me on. I can''t explain it. I like feeling it on my tongue, the taste, I think I even kind of like the way it makes my jaw ache after I''ve been blowing a guy for a long time."'
-		'"I like the ache too," Albina says. "Especially if it''s right after a rough fucking. I like feeling like a used dish rag at the end of a good fuck. But I''d still rather they just blow their load in my ass instead of in my mouth. It gets boring swallowing."'
+		'"I like the ache too," she says. "Especially if it''s right after a rough fucking. I like feeling like a used dish rag at the end of a good fuck, but I''d still rather they just blow their load in my ass instead of in my mouth. It gets boring swallowing."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'spit_or_swallow'
-		act'Me too':
+		act 'Me too':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"Me too," you nod. "There''s something about hot cum shooting up your ass that just..."'
 			'"Exactly," she grins.'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 		end
 		
-		act'I prefer creampies':
+		act 'I prefer creampies':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"I prefer creampies myself," you smirk. You''re about to continue when you notice the color drain from Albina''s face. "What?"'
 			'"Nothing," she says, shrugging like she didn''t just give you a look like she''d seen a ghost. "I was just surprised was all."'
-			act'Let it go':
+			act 'Let it go':
 				cla & *clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-				'She seems spooked for some reason, but you don''t want to make her uncomfortable so you decide to let it go.'
+				'She seems spooked for some reason, but you don''t want to make her uncomfortable and decide to let it go.'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 			end
 			
@@ -443,7 +439,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_fav':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 				'Something is off. Albina is so open about her sex life, it feels strange that she''d be surprised about anything sex related.'
 				'"No really," you insist, pressing on. "What''s so weird about liking creampies?"'
-				'"Nothing!" she snaps. "I said I was just surprised! Why can''t you accept what I tell you you dumb bitch? Fuck off!"'
+				'"Nothing!" she snaps. "I said I was just surprised! Why can''t you just accept what I told you, you dumb bitch?!"'
 				*nl
 				'Your eyes go wide in shock at her sudden flash of anger. Worried she might slap you if you say anything else, you stay silent until she begins talking to you again like nothing happened.'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
@@ -451,7 +447,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_fav':
 		end
 	end
 	
-	act'Everything!':
+	act 'Everything!':
 		cla & *nl
 		if pcs_traits['cumeater'] = 1:
 			'"Everything!" you grin. "I love pleasing a man. I love hearing him moan. I love being in control of his pleasure. I love the taste of cock. I love insisting that he relax and let me take care of it. I love feeling him get harder in my mouth. I love the intimate connection that we form. And..."'
@@ -469,7 +465,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_fav':
 	end
 	
 	if arrsize('$lover') > 0:
-		act'I do it for my boyfriend':
+		act 'I do it for my boyfriend':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"I like making my boyfriend feel good," you smile. "He likes it, so I like it."'
 			'"Oh puh-leez," Albina rolls her eyes. "If I knew you were going to talk about romantic bullshit like that, I wouldn''t have asked. Romance is for decrepit old fucks."'
@@ -478,7 +474,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_fav':
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'spit_or_swallow'
 		end
 		
-		act'I love my boyfriend':
+		act 'I love my boyfriend':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"Because of my boyfriend," you say, involuntarily smiling as your thoughts drift towards him. "I love him so much and I love seeing the pleasure on his face when his cock is in my mouth. I want to spoil him, so I love giving him head."'
 			'"Oh puh-leez," Albina rolls her eyes. "If I knew you were going to talk about romantic bullshit like that, I woudln''t have asked. Romance is for old decrepit fucks."'
@@ -490,84 +486,84 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_fav':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'spit_or_swallow':
-	act'I spit':
+	act 'I spit':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"What do you mean?" you say with a puzzled look. "I don''t swallow. I just spit?"'
 		'"What do <i>you</i> mean?" Albina asks, giving you a bemused look right back.'
-		act'It tastes funny':
+		act 'It tastes funny':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"It tastes funny," you say matter of factly. "So I just spit it out."'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'swallow_why'
 		end
 		
-		act'It tastes gross':
+		act 'It tastes gross':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"Ugh! No," you grimace in disgust. "It tastes so gross. I could never swallow that swill. I just spit."'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'swallow_why'
 		end
 		
-		act'It feels weird':
+		act 'It feels weird':
 			cla & *nl
-			'"It feels weird," you shrug. "The flavor is whatever but I can''t get over the texture. It''s like swallowing a load of snot. So I just spit."'
+			'"It feels weird," you shrug. "The flavor is whatever, but I can''t get over the texture. It''s like swallowing a load of snot, so I just spit."'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'swallow_why'
 		end
 		
-		act'Swallowing isn''t my thing':
+		act 'Swallowing isn''t my thing':
 			cla & *nl
-			'"Eh, swallowing just isn''t really my thing," you shrug. "Never been into it. Avoid it when I can."'
+			'"Eh, swallowing just isn''t really my thing," you shrug. "Never been into it. I avoid it when I can."'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'swallow_why'
 		end
 	end
 	
-	act'Not really':
+	act 'Not really':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Not really," you shrug. "It''s just part of sex. I don''t really care one way or the other. As long as it makes him happy."'
+		'"Not really," you shrug. "It''s just part of sex. I don''t really care one way or the other as long as it makes him happy."'
 		'"I guess," Albina sighs. "Well <i>I</i> get tired of it."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'I got used to the taste':
+	act 'I got used to the taste':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-		'"I got used to the taste after a while," you shrug. "It''s not my favorite thing in the world, but I''m  used to it."'
-		'"I guess I''m like that too," Albina sighs. "Still gets tiring if it''s all a guy wants to do though."'
+		'"I got used to the taste after a while," you shrug. "It''s not my favorite thing in the world, but I''m used to it."'
+		'"I guess I''m like that too," Albina sighs. "Still. Gets tiring if it''s all a guy wants to do, though."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'Spitters are quitters':
+	act 'Spitters are quitters':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"Spitters are quitters," you smirk.'
-		'"Well you''ve got that much right," Albina laughs back.'
+		'"Well you''ve got that much right," she laughs back.'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'I like the taste':
+	act 'I like the taste':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"I like the taste," you smile. "There''s something satisfying about the thick salty flavor of it."'
 		'"Ew!" She wrinkles her nose in disgust. "You <i>like</i> it?"'
 		'"Yeah. You don''t?"'
-		'"No! It tastes like shit!" Albina fake gags.'
+		'"No! It tastes like shit!" she replies and fake gags.'
 		'"Then why swallow?"'
-		'"Cause you''re <i>supposed</i> to. Duh."'
+		'"Cause you''re <i>supposed</i> to? Duh!"'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'Makes me feel sexy':
+	act 'It makes me feel sexy':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"I love swallowing," you grin. "It makes me feel sexy. Just the look on a guy''s face when you gulp down his load, nngh~! That alone is worth it."'
-		'"Different strokes I guess," Albina says wryly. "Well <i>I</i> get tired of it."'
+		'"Different strokes I guess," she says wryly. "Well <i>I</i> get tired of it."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'swallow_why':
-	'"What the fuck?" Albina stares at you like you just said you have a meter long cock. "You <i>never</i> spit. You always swallow."'
-	act'Why would I do that?':
+	'"What the fuck?" Albina stares at you like you just said you have a meter long cock. "You <i>never</i> spit. You <i>always</i> swallow."'
+	act 'Why would I do that?':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"Why would I do that?" you ask. "Why would I swallow if I don''t want to?"'
 		'"Because you''re <i>supposed</i> to," she insists. "You know what? Let''s just drop it. You''re weird."'
@@ -576,12 +572,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swallow_why':
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'Do you like the taste?':
+	act 'Do you like the taste?':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"Why?" you ask. "Do <i>you</i> like the taste?"'
 		'"No, of course I don''t like the taste!" she says wrinkling her nose. "It''s awful!"'
 		'"Then why swallow?"'
-		'"Cause you''re supposed to. <i>Duh.</i>" Albina gives you another odd look. "You know what? Let''s just drop it. You''re weird. '
+		'"Cause you''re supposed to. <i>Duh.</i>" Albina gives you another odd look. "You know what? Let''s just drop it. You''re weird."'
 		*nl
 		'<i>I''m the weird one here?</i> you think to yourself.'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
@@ -589,70 +585,70 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swallow_why':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_talk':
-	'"Do you use birth control?" Albina asks you.'
+	'"Do you use birth control?" Albina asks.'
 	if birth_control['think_safe'] = 0:
 		if pillcon2 > 0 and pillcon2 < 36000:
 			'"I just started the pill," you tell her. "But it''s too soon for it to start being effective yet."'
-			'"I''m on the pill too," she nods. "I hate condoms but I''m terrified of getting knocked up so I take them <i>religiously</i>."'
-			act'I want to be extra safe':
+			'"I''m on the pill too," she nods. "I hate condoms, but I''m terrified of getting knocked up so I take them <i>religiously</i>."'
+			act 'I want to be extra safe':
 				cla & *nl
-				'"Me too," you say. "Not the condom part but the pregnant part. I insist every guy uses a condom I''m so scared it''s going to break I''m taking the pill just to be extra safe."'
-				'"I get that," Albina replies, staring off into the corner for a few seconds before glancing back at you again.'
+				'"Me too," you say. "Not the condom part, but the pregnant part. I insist every guy uses a condom, but I''m so scared it''s going to break that I''m taking the pill just to be extra safe."'
+				'"I get that," she replies, staring off into the corner for a few seconds before glancing back at you again.'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 			end
 			
-			act'I hate condoms too':
+			act 'I hate condoms too':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"Me too," you say. "I can''t <i>feel</i> anything when the guy''s wearing a rubber. I want skin on skin contact. I can''t wait till I can start going bareback."'
-				'"It''s way better," Albina grins. "You''re gonna love it."'
+				'"It''s way better," she grins. "You''re gonna love it."'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 			end
 			
-			act'I don''t want to worry':
+			act 'I don''t want to worry':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"I just don''t want to worry about it," you sigh. "What if the guy doesn''t have one? What if I don''t have one? What if the condom breaks? He said he''s going to pull out, but what if he doesn''t? It''s too much stress. Easier to just take a pill every day."'
 				'"I would <i>never</i> let a guy to go bareback on me if I wasn''t on the pill," Albina says, looking horrified at you. "You can''t trust them with that shit. For fuck''s sake, I take it up the ass most of the time and I <i>still</i> don''t trust them not to cum in my pussy. You know what I mean?"'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 			end
 			
-			act'I love creampies':
+			act 'I love creampies':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"I <i>love</i> creampies," you gush. "Once the pill starts kicking in, I''ll be able to get all the creampies I want."'
-				'"Oh." Albina gulps, looking away.'
+				'"Oh..." she gulps before looking away.'
 				'"What''s with that reaction? Feeling turned on? You don''t have a creampie fetish, do you?" you snicker teasingly.'
 				*nl
-				'<b>"Fuck off!"</b> Albina shouts, whirling on you with fury in her eyes. "I don''t have a fetish for that shit so <b>shut the fuck</b> up and keep it that way."'
+				'<b>"Fuck off!"</b> she shouts, whirling on you with fury in her eyes. "I don''t have a fetish for that shit so <b>shut the fuck</b> up and keep it that way."'
 				*nl
 				'You back off, stunned by her sudden explosion. What the hell was that about?'
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 			end
 		else
-			act'None':
+			act 'None':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"No, I don''t use any kind of birth control," you shake your head and Albina goes visibly pale.'
-				'"What the fuck! Why not? Aren''t you afraid of getting pregnant?"'
-				act'Don''t see the point':
+				'"What the fuck?! Why not?! Aren''t you afraid of getting pregnant?!"'
+				act 'Don''t see the point':
 					cla & *nl
 					'"Just don''t see the point," you shrug, revealing how irresponsible your behavior is. "Taking pills is such a chore and condoms suck. Unprotected sex is more fun."'
-					'"Don''t see the point?!" Albina sputters. She sighs, shaking her head. "I don''t understand you at all."'
+					'"Don''t see the point?!" she sputters before sighing and shaking her head. "I don''t understand you at all."'
 					gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 				end
 				
-				act'I want to have a baby':
+				act 'I want to have a baby':
 					cla & *nl
 					if npc_pregtalk['A23'] = 0:
-						'"What if that''s why I don''t use any?" you smile and Albina''s jaw drops. "I kind of <i>want</i> to have a baby."'
+						'"What if that''s <i>why</i> I don''t use any?" you smile and Albina''s jaw drops. "I kind of <i>want</i> to have a baby."'
 						if age < 18:
 							'"At our age? Seriously? You''re not even 18! You want to be a teen mom and fuck up your life?"'
 						else
 							'"At our age? Seriously? You want to be a teen mom and fuck up your life?"'
 						end
 						
-						act'I''ll be a great mom':
+						act 'I''ll be a great mom':
 							cla & *clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-							'"You think I wouldn''t be a great mom?" you ask. "I do."'
-							'"That''s not the point," Albina says, shaking her head. "A kid is a lot of responsibility. They become the priority in your life. They can get in the way of dreams and other things you want to do..."'
+							'"You think I wouldn''t be a great mom?" you ask dejectedly. "I do..."'
+							'"That''s not the point," she replies while shaking her head. "A kid is a lot of responsibility. They become the priority in your life. They can get in the way of dreams and other things you want to do..."'
 							*nl
 							'She trails off, looking away.'
 							*nl
@@ -661,34 +657,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_talk':
 						end
 						
 						if pcs_lover - pcs_girlfriends > 0:
-							act'I love my boyfriend':
+							act 'I love my boyfriend':
 								cla & *clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 								'"But I love my boyfriend so much!" you say. "He''ll be a great dad, I know it."'
-								'"That''s what Mama thought," Albina says with a disapproving look. "Just because a guy seems nice now doesn''t mean he won''t turn into a total fuckbag the moment you''re knocked up. Try to remember that before you get pregnant."'								
+								'"That''s what Mama thought," she says with a disapproving look. "Just because a guy seems nice now doesn''t mean he won''t turn into a total fuckbag the moment you''re knocked up. Try to remember that before you get pregnant."'								
 								gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 							end
 						end
 					else
-						'"What if that''s why I don''t use any?" Albina''s jaw drops and with a bashful smile you say, "I want another baby."'
-						'"You''re crazy," she says, shaking her head. "I can''t believe you want to push another one of those things out of your pussy. Didn''t it hurt enough the first time?"'
-						'"You''ll understand when you''re a mother," you reply haughtily. Albina gulps and looks away.'
+						'"What if that''s <i>why</i> I don''t use any?" you reply and Albina''s jaw drops. "I want another baby," you say with a bashful smile.'
+						'"You''re crazy," she says while shaking her head. "I can''t believe you want to push another one of those things out of your pussy. Didn''t it hurt enough the first time?"'
+						'"You''ll understand when you''re a mother," you reply haughtily and Albina gulps and looks away.'
 						'"I haven''t decided if I want kids..." she says, a slight shake in her voice.'
 						gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 					end
 				end
 			end
 			
-			act'Condoms':
+			act 'Condoms':
 				cla & *nl
 				'"Just condoms," you shrug. "No medication though."'
-				'"Ugh, I <i>hate</i> condoms," Albina moans. "That''s why I''m on the pill. Why don''t you switch?"'
-				act'More reliable':
+				'"Ugh, I <i>hate</i> condoms," she moans. "That''s why I''m on the pill. Why don''t you switch?"'
+				act 'More reliable':
 					cla & *nl
 					'"Condoms are more reliable," you say. "I can''t forget to use a condom like I can forget to take a pill."'
 					'"But condoms can still break," she argues.'
 					'"And I can get too tired and fall asleep before remembering to take my pill," you point out. "In the grand scheme of things, condoms are just safer."'
-					'"I prefer bareback," Albina says, before taking a deep breath and sighing. "But I also take my pill religiously. I set alarms and everything. I guess better to use condoms if you don''t trust yourself to take the pill... Wait, but why not get the shot instead?"'
+					'"I prefer bareback," Albina says before taking a deep breath and sighing. "But I also take my pill religiously. I set alarms and everything. I guess it''s better to use condoms if you don''t trust yourself to take the pill... Wait, why not get the shot instead?"'
 					gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 				end
 				
@@ -697,10 +693,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_talk':
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'birth_control_hormones'
 			end
 			
-			act'The pullout method':
+			act 'The pullout method':
 				cla & *nl
-				'"Does the pullout method count?" you grin. Albina looks at you like you just said you want to fuck a fire truck.'
-				'"Seriously?! You would trust a guy with that shit? I take it mostly up the ass and I <i>still</i> take the pill because I don''t trust a guy not to blow his load in my pussy."'
+				'"Does the pullout method count?" you grin and Albina looks at you like you just said you want to fuck a fire truck.'
+				'"Seriously?! You would trust a guy with that shit? I mostly take it up the ass and I <i>still</i> take the pill because I don''t trust a guy not to blow his load in my pussy."'
 				act'Condoms suck':
 					cla & *nl
 					'"But condoms are the <i>worst!</i>" you moan. "I can''t <i>feel</i> anything when the guy''s wearing a rubber. I want skin on skin contact. It''s bareback or nothing."'
@@ -712,21 +708,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_talk':
 				end
 				
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'birth_control_pill_hassle_no_condoms'
-					
+			
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'birth_control_hormones'
 			end
 			
-			act'The calendar method and condoms':
+			act 'The calendar method and condoms':
 				cla & *clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 				'"I use the calendar method," you tell her.'
-				'"The <i>what?</i>" Albina stares at you with a confused expression.'
-				'"The calendar method." You begin explaining. "You start by tracking your period and use that to figure out when your cycles are. From then, you can figure out when you''re ovulating and when you''re likely to get pregnant from sex and when it''s safe. I go bareback on safe days and use condoms on danger days."'
+				'"The <i>what?</i>" She stares at you with a confused expression.'
+				'"The calendar method," you begin explaining. "You start by tracking your period and use that to figure out when your cycles are. From there, you can figure out when you''re ovulating and likely to get pregnant and when it''s safe. I go bareback on safe days and use condoms on danger days."'
 				*nl
-				'"Oh <i>god</i>, it''s the worst of both," she says, grimacing at you. "Condoms <i>and</i> still in danger of being knocked up!"'
-				'"It''s not dangerous," you protest. "Once you have your cycle down, it''s just a matter of keeping track."'
-				'"And if you''re too horny to remember what day it is?" Albina gives you a dead stare.'
-				act'Uhh...':
+				'"Oh <i>god</i>, it''s the worst of both," she says while grimacing at you. "Condoms <i>and</i> still in danger of being knocked up!"'
+				'"It''s not dangerous!" you protest. "Once you have your cycle down, it''s just a matter of keeping track."'
+				'"And if you''re too horny to remember what day it is?" she asks while giving you a dead stare.'
+				act 'Uhh...':
 					cla & *clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 					'"Uhh..."  you say dumbly as Albina continues to stare at you.'
@@ -739,15 +735,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_talk':
 				gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'birth_control_pill_problem'
 			end
 			
-			act'The calendar method (no condoms)':
+			act 'The calendar method (no condoms)':
 				cla & *clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 				'"I use the calendar method," you tell her.'
-				'"The <i>what?</i>" Albina stares at you with a confused expression.'
-				'"The calendar method." You begin explaining. "You start by tracking your period and use that to figure out when your cycles are. From then, you can figure out when you''re ovulating and when you''re likely to get pregnant from sex and when it''s safe. Guys can come inside me on safe days and I make sure to warn them if it''s a danger day so they can pull out."'
+				'"The <i>what?</i>" She stares at you with a confused expression.'
+				'"The calendar method," you begin explaining. "You start by tracking your period and use that to figure out when your cycles are. From there, you can figure out when you''re ovulating and likely to get pregnant and when it''s safe. Guys can cum inside me on safe days and I make sure to warn them if it''s a danger day so they can pull out."'
 				*nl
-				'"Seriously?! You would trust a guy with that shit?" She looks at you in bewilderment. "I take it mostly up the ass and I <i>still</i> take the pill because I don''t trust a guy not to blow his load in my pussy."'
-				act'Condoms suck':
+				'"Seriously?! You would trust a guy with that shit?" She looks at you in bewilderment. "I mostly take it up the ass and I <i>still</i> take the pill because I don''t trust a guy not to blow his load in my pussy."'
+				act 'Condoms suck':
 					cla & *nl
 					'"But condoms are the <i>worst!</i>" you moan. "I can''t <i>feel</i> anything when the guy''s wearing a rubber. I want skin on skin contact. It''s bareback or nothing."'
 					'"I hate condoms too, but that doesn''t explain why you won''t just get on the pill?"'
@@ -761,45 +757,45 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_talk':
 		end
 	else
 		'"I''m on the pill," you tell her.'
-		'"I''m on the pill too," she nods. "I hate condoms but I''m terrified of getting knocked up so I take them <i>religiously</i>."'
-		act'I want to be extra safe':
+		'"I''m on the pill too," she nods. "I hate condoms, but I''m terrified of getting knocked up so I take them <i>religiously</i>."'
+		act 'I want to be extra safe':
 			cla & *nl
-			'"Me too," you say. "Not the condom part but the pregnant part. I insist every guy uses a condom I''m so scared it''s going to break I take the pill just to be extra safe."'
-			'"I get that," Albina replies, staring off into the corner for a few seconds before glancing back at you again.'
+			'"Me too," you say. "Not the condom part, but the pregnant part. I insist every guy uses a condom, but I''m so scared it''s going to break that I take the pill just to be extra safe."'
+			'"I get that," she replies, staring off into the corner for a few seconds before glancing back at you again.'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 		end
 		
-		act'I hate condoms too':
+		act 'I hate condoms too':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"Me too," you say. "I can''t <i>feel</i> anything when the guy''s wearing a rubber. I want skin on skin contact. It''s so much better bareback."'
-			'"Damn straight," Albina grins, high-fiving you. "Condoms are fucking dumb."'
+			'"Damn straight," she grins while high-fiving you. "Condoms are fucking dumb."'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 		end
 		
-		act'I don''t want to worry':
+		act 'I don''t want to worry':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"I just don''t want to worry about it," you sigh. "What if the guy doesn''t have one? What if I don''t have one? What if the condom breaks? He said he''s going to pull out, but what if he doesn''t? It''s too much stress. Easier to just take a pill every day."'
-			'"I would <i>never</i> let a guy to go bareback on me if I wasn''t on the pill," Albina says, looking horrified at you. "You can''t trust them with that shit. For fuck''s sake, I take it up the ass most of the time and I still don''t trust them not to cum in my pussy. You know what I mean?"'
+			'"I would <i>never</i> let a guy to go bareback on me if I wasn''t on the pill," Albina says, looking horrified at you. "You can''t trust them with that shit. For fuck''s sake, I mostly take it up the ass and I <i>still</i> don''t trust them not to cum in my pussy. You know what I mean?"'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 		end
 		
 		act'I love creampies':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"I <i>love</i> creampies," you gush. "When a guy comes inside me, it''s the best feeling in the world. I can feel his cum fill me up inside. Can''t get that with a condom."'
-			'"Oh." Albina gulps, looking away.'
+			'"Oh..." she gulps before looking away.'
 			'"What''s with that reaction? Feeling turned on? You don''t have a creampie fetish, do you?" you snicker teasingly.'
 			*nl
-			'<b>"Fuck off!"</b> Albina shouts, whirling on you with fury in her eyes. "I don''t have a fetish for that shit so <b>shut the fuck</b> up and keep it that way."'
+			'<b>"Fuck off!"</b> she shouts, whirling on you with fury in her eyes. "I don''t have a fetish for that shit so <b>shut the fuck</b> up and keep it that way."'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 		end
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_pill_hassle_condom_ver':
-	act'Too much hassle':
+	act 'Too much hassle':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"Too much hassle," you sigh. "I don''t want to remember to take a pill every day. It''s just easier to put a rubber on the guy''s cock before he fucks me. If the condom breaks, I can just get a morning after pill."'
-		'"I guess that''s fair," Albina concedes. "Just takes one missed day to get knocked up. That''s why I take mine religiously. I set alarms and everything to remind me. But you don''t know what you''re missing out on. Bareback is the best."'
+		'"I guess that''s fair," she concedes. "Just takes one missed day to get knocked up. That''s why I take mine religiously. I set alarms and everything to remind me. You don''t know what you''re missing out on, though. Bareback is the best."'
 		*nl
 		'She grins a slutty grin at you.'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
@@ -807,10 +803,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_pill_hassle_condom_ver':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_pill_hassle_no_condoms':
-	act'Too much hassle':
+	act 'Too much hassle':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"Too much hassle," you sigh. "I don''t want to remember to take a pill every day. It''s just one more annoying thing to do. I just want to have sex and enjoy it. Besides, I can always get a morning after pill."'
-		'"You''re crazy," Albina says shaking her head. "Condom or bareback, I wouldn''t fuck guys <i>at all</i> if I wasn''t on birth control... but that''s why I need to be on birth control."'
+		'"You''re crazy," she says while shaking her head. "Condom or bareback, I wouldn''t fuck guys <i>at all</i> if I wasn''t on birth control... but that''s why I need to be on birth control."'
 		*nl
 		'You both erupt into laughter.'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
@@ -818,9 +814,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_pill_hassle_no_condoms':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_hormones':
-	act'No hormones':
+	act 'No hormones':
 		cla & *nl
-		'"I don''t want to mess with my body like that," you say, shaking your head. "Birth control hormones stop you from getting pregnant, but they do all other kinds of other stuff to you. I hear horror stories from changing your tastes to sudden weight gain to killing your sex drive. Which sort of defeats the point of getting on the pill in the first place."'
+		'"I don''t want to mess with my body like that," you say while shaking your head. "Birth control hormones stop you from getting pregnant, but they do all other kinds of other stuff to you. I hear horror stories from changing your tastes to sudden weight gain to killing your sex drive. Which sort of defeats the point of getting on the pill in the first place."'
 		'"No periods though," Albina smirks. "But I guess you have a point. Since I started the pill, I get a lot wetter than I used to. But that just made surprise buttsex better. All natural lube.'
 		*nl
 		'She grins a slutty grin at you and you both erupt into laughter.'
@@ -829,11 +825,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_hormones':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'birth_control_pill_problem':
-	act'Pill has the same problem':
+	act 'Pill has the same problem':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		'"The pill has the same problem with memory," you point out. "If I''m too horny to forget a condom, what if I''m too horny to remember my pill? Or too tired?"'
-		'"I guess you have a point there," Albina sighs. "My fear of getting pregnant outweighs my horniness, but I guess not every girl is like that. Some of them are just dumb like you."'
+		'"I guess you have a point there," she sighs. "My fear of getting pregnant outweighs my horniness, but I guess not every girl is like that. Some of them are just dumb like you."'
 		'"If your fear is greater than your horniness, then you must be constantly wetting yourself!"'
 		*nl
 		'She whips around, smacking you hard with a pillow. You cackle with glee, laughing harder as her blows pick up speed and force, but she never stops grinning so you know she can''t be that mad.'
@@ -851,28 +847,28 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'lesbian_talk1':
 	if npc_sex['A23'] = 1:
-		'"Have you ever done it with another girl before?" Albina ask you. You raise an eyebrow and she rolls her eyes. "<i>Besides</i> me, obviously."'
+		'"Have you ever done it with another girl before?" Albina asks. You raise an eyebrow and she rolls her eyes. "<i>Besides</i> me, obviously."'
 	else
-		'"Have you ever done it with another girl before?" Albina ask you.'
+		'"Have you ever done it with another girl before?" Albina asks.'
 	end
 	
 !!	if lesbian = 0:
 !!	hornguy6 - not using the variable because I don''t trust it to be seeded correctly
 !!	leaving it up to the player to be honest
 	if npc_sex['A23'] = 1:
-		act'Just you':
+		act 'Just you':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"Just you," you say.'
 			'"Me too," she replies, a faint blush coloring her cheeks. "What''s your favorite part about fucking me?"'
 			gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'lesbian_talk2'
 		end
 	else
-		act'No':
+		act 'No':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"Can''t say I have," you shake your head.'
-			'"Oh. Never mind then," she says turning away from you, a faint blush coloring her cheeks.'
-			act'Keep talking': cla & gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
-!!			act'Did you want to try?':
+			'"Oh. Never mind then," she says before turning away from you, a faint blush coloring her cheeks.'
+			act 'Keep talking': cla & gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
+!!			act 'Did you want to try?':
 				
 !!			end
 		end
@@ -880,14 +876,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lesbian_talk1':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'lesbian_talk2':
-	act'I like your taste':
+	act 'I like your taste':
 		cla & *nl
-		'"I like the way your pussy tastes," you say, licking your lips. Albina shamelessly grins back at you.'
+		'"I like the way your pussy tastes," you say, licking your lips as Albina shamelessly grins back at you.'
 		'"I like the way I taste too. But you''re pretty tasty yourself."'
 		gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'sex_talk'
 	end
 	
-	act'You''re good at eating pussy':
+	act 'You''re good at eating pussy':
 		cla & *nl
 		'"When you eat me out," you grin. "How''d you get so good at eating pussy?"'
 		'"I don''t really think about it," she shrugs, but you can tell she''s feeling smug about the compliment. "I''m having too much fun. Maybe I''m good because I like it so much."'
@@ -1026,7 +1022,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal_questions_open':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'anal2':
-	'"Try playing with your asshole while masturbating, just get used to something touching you down there. If you''re feeling brave, try a finger up to your knuckle right when you''re about to cum. Then next time try one from the start. Or a small dildo with lots of lube. Or better yet, a butt plug. Then you can practice all day," she smirks. "Find out what works for you and <i>then</i> try it with real dick, otherwise it''ll be <i>very</i> painful and could put you off trying it again."'
+	'"Try playing with your asshole while masturbating and get used to something touching you down there. If you''re feeling brave, try a finger up to your knuckle right when you''re about to cum. Then next time try one from the start. Or a small dildo with lots of lube. Or better yet, a butt plug. Then you can practice all day," she smirks. "Find out what works for you and <i>then</i> try it with a real dick, otherwise it''ll be <i>very</i> painful and could put you off trying it again."'
 	gs 'albina_sex_chat', 'anal_end1'
 end
 

locations/intro_city_m.qsrc

@@ -39,7 +39,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							act 'Find a way out':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_working.jpg"></center>'
-								'You follow the passage and find yourself in a construction site. There are several <b>keep out</b> signs visible from here. Shit.'
+								'You follow the passage and find yourself in a construction site. There are several <b>KEEP OUT</b> signs visible from here. Shit.'
 								act 'Sneak out':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_road.jpg"></center>'
@@ -93,7 +93,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wakeup':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 					'"What do you want from me?" you ask.'
 					'"Well, the amulet obviously," Tatiana replies. "When I looked for you, I was hoping to get that object of power to study, but the power transferred to you first. The amulet will now be pretty much useless."'
-					'"But this is not good for you. You may think that since you have the amulet''s power, you can do anything. But in reality, you''re helpless without the skill to use it. Its power already knocked you out and I had to use magic to stabilize you."'
+					'"But this is not good for you. You may think that since you have the amulet''s power, you can do anything, but in reality, you''re helpless without the skill to use it. Its power already knocked you out and I had to use magic to stabilize you."'
 
 					act 'What is this amulet?':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -107,12 +107,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wakeup':
 						act 'So what should I do?':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-							'"Lay low for now. Get on with your life. We''ll contact you if anything comes up. Gustav here will drop you off at your apartment. Don''t worry I already let your parents and grandparent know you decided to head back to your apartment in Pavlovsk."'
+							'"Lay low for now. Get on with your life. We''ll contact you if anything comes up. Gustav here will drop you off at your apartment. Don''t worry, I already let your parents and grandparents know you decided to head back to your apartment in Pavlovsk."'
 							act 'Follow Gustav':
 								money = 5000
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/2_sg/start_sg.jpg"></center>'
-								'You give Gustav directions to your apartment building. Half an hour later, he drops you off in front of your apartment building in Pavlovsk. You head inside and feeling exhausted after the days events you go to your room and collapse on the bed, quickly falling asleep.'
+								'You give Gustav directions to your apartment building. Half an hour later, he drops you off in front of your apartment building in Pavlovsk. You head inside and, feeling exhausted after the days events, you go to your room and collapse on the bed, quickly falling asleep.'
 								act '<center><b>Done</b></center>': gt 'intro_city', 'city_intro'
 							end
 						end

locations/intro_city_tg.qsrc

@@ -15,7 +15,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	act 'Go to the bathroom':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/mikhail_2.jpg"></center>'
-		'Being careful not to wake up your daughter, you head to the bathroom and take care of your morning routine.'
+		'Taking care not to wake up your daughter, you quietly head to the bathroom and take care of your morning routine.'
 		act 'Leave the apartment':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/3.jpg"></center>'
@@ -23,40 +23,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			act 'Go to work':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/4.jpg"></center>'
-				'You turn the key and the engine roars to life. The morning rush hour means that the roads are filled with traffic as you head to work. You drive for what feels like an eternity, but you eventually reach the office. The music on the radio was pleasant, at least.'
+				'You turn the key and the engine roars to life. You drive for what feels like an eternity through the morning rush hour, but you eventually reach the office. At least the music on the radio was pleasant.'
 				act 'Park at the office':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/5.jpg"></center>'
-					'You pull into a parking lot near the building and manage to find a good spot. You greet the security guard on your way in before heading upstairs to your office. Shortly after you sit down at your desk and boot up your computer, your boss''s secretary comes in and hands you a folder with several travel documents.'
-					*nl
-					'"Am I going on a business trip or something?" you inquire.'
-					*nl
-					'"Yes, the director said it had something to do with a construction project out in the middle of nowhere. That''s pretty much all I know," she replies.'
-					*nl
-					'After she leaves, you read over the travel documents and fill them out. Time to go to the director.'
+					'You pull into a parking lot near the building and manage to find a good spot. You greet the security guard on your way into the building, then go upstairs to your office. Shortly after you sit down at your desk and boot up your computer, your boss''s secretary comes in and hands you a folder with several travel documents.'
+					'"Am I going on a business trip or something?" you ask.'
+					'"Yes, the director said it had something to do with a construction project out in the middle of nowhere, but that''s pretty much all I know," she says.'
+					'After she leaves, you read over the travel documents and fill them out before heading to the director''s office.'
 					act 'Go and see your boss':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_roman.jpg"></center>'
-						'You head into the directors'' office, greet him and hand him the papers to sign. The director, Roman Gromov, scans through the text before signing off on it with a broad, sweeping stroke.'
+						'You head into the directors'' office, greet him and hand him the papers to sign. The director scans through the text before signing off on it with a broad, sweeping stroke.'
 						'"Ms. Glavbukh is in her office. Get some travel money while I make a few calls. We''ll discuss your trip when you get back."'
 						act 'Go to the chief accountant':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_marina.jpg"></center>'
-							'Marina is indeed already in her office. After filing your signed travel documents, she grumbles about antiquated systems as she counts out the money.'
+							'The accountant is already in her office. After filing your signed travel documents, she grumbles about antiquated systems as she counts out the money.'
 							act 'Return to the director':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_roman.jpg"></center>'
-								'Roman is busy talking on the phone when you re-enter the his office. He gestures for you to sit down on one of the chairs across from him.'
-								*nl
-								'"Yes, I understand... yes. I''ll send Mikhail over ASAP, he''ll represent me... Yes... Tell your men to work on some other parts of the project in the meantime. Have Igor guard the pit and let no one make any fuss, and make sure nobody gets wind of this and, you know, try to halt the construction... Okay, we''ll keep in touch."'
-								*nl
-								'Roman hangs up and turns to you. "Last night, while excavating for the foundations, the workers stumbled upon something; one of the excavators dug into a hollow space of some sort. Luckily, Igor was on site and halted the excavation.'
-								'"It''s not clear what exactly it is, yet. Maybe an abandoned bunker or a cave. But in any case, if there are any more chambers under the foundation, we might not be able to build on the land. So what I want you to do, is to go to the construction site, figure out exactly what the problem is and solve this whole mess as quickly as possible."'
+								'The director is busy talking on the phone when you re-enter his office and he gestures for you to sit on one of the chairs across from him.'
+								'"Yes, I understand... Yes. I''ll send Mikhail over ASAP to represent me... Yes... Tell your men to work on some other parts of the project in the meantime. Have Igor guard the pit and make sure nobody gets wind of this... Okay, we''ll keep in touch."'
+								'He hangs up and turns to you. "The workers stumbled upon something last night; one of the excavators dug into a hollow space of some sort. It''s not clear exactly what it is, but if there are any more chambers under the foundation, we might not be able to build on the land. I want you to go to the construction site, figure out exactly what the problem is and solve this whole mess as quickly as possible."'
 								act 'Remind him of the correct procedures':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_roman.jpg"></center>'
-									'"Firstly we need to talk to..." you start to say, but are quickly interrupted.'
-									'"Mikhail, do you realize what''s at stake here? We''re near the end of our credit line, we still have unfinalized agreements on the project''s contract, and we already have guys digging the pit. If there''s a huge hole under the foundation and we can''t build on the site, that could bankrupt the company. So this mysterious structure must be addressed immediately and I have to hold the fort here and keep a lid on things."'
+									'"Firstly we need to talk to..." you start to say, but are quickly interrupted by your boss.'
+									'"Mikhail, do you realize what''s at stake here? We''re near the end of our credit line, we still have unfinalized agreements on the project''s contract, and we already have guys digging the pit. If we can''t build on the site, that could bankrupt the company. This mysterious structure must be addressed immediately and I have to hold the fort here and keep a lid on things."'
 									act 'Doesn''t look like you have a choice': gt 'intro_city_tg', 'roadPRE'
 								end
 							end
@@ -72,19 +66,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roadPRE':
 	music_loop = 0
 	CLOSE ALL
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/4.jpg"></center>'
-	'You leave the office and phone Luda in your car. You explain the situation to her and drive off to the construction site.'
+	'You leave the office and phone your wife in the car. You explain the situation to her and drive off to the construction site as soon as you hang up.'
 	act 'Drive':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_working.jpg"></center>'
-		'You''re on the highway for hours before you arrive at the town near the site, leaving you feeling tired. Before you can check into a hotel and get some sleep, you need to get an understanding of the magnitude of the problem you''re dealing with. You follow the directions to the site, Igor calling on the way and telling you that you won''t have to go through a security check.'
-		'You arrive and park your car at the site. You see Igor waving at you from a distance and walk up to him.'
+		'You''ve been on the highway for hours when you arrive at the town near the site. Before you can check into a hotel and get some sleep, you need to get an understanding of the magnitude of the problem you''re dealing with, so you follow the directions to the site. Igor calls on the way and tells you that you won''t have to go through a security check.'
+		'You soon arrive and park your car at the site. You see Igor waving at you from a distance and walk up to him.'
 		act 'Greet Igor':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_igor.jpg"></center>'
-			'Igor greets you. He''s obviously concerned about the situation and leads you to the pit''s fenced-off entrance without delay. It rained earlier, so the ground is soft and muddy.'
-			'"The ladder''s over there," Igor informs you, while pointing to your left.'
+			'Igor is clearly concerned about the situation and quickly leads you to the pit''s fenced-off entrance. "The ladder''s over there," he informs you while pointing to your left.'
 			'You reach the hole in the ground and peek inside using the small flashlight from your keychain. "There seems to be a floor about 5 meters down."'
-			'"Well, what do you think Mikhail? Shall we go down?" Igor asks with a faint glimmer of adventure in his eyes.'
+			'"Well, what do you think? Shall we go down?" Igor asks with a faint glimmer of adventure in his eyes.'
 			act 'Descend':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_cave_1.jpg"></center>'
@@ -109,26 +102,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roadPRE':
 						act 'Enter the room':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_cave_altar.jpg"></center>'
-							'There''s an altar in the center of the room with pots, several gold amulets and even stone figures scattered around it. You continue looking around the room curiously, trying to figure out what it''s purpose was.'
-							'Looking closely at the altar, you notice a strange little amulet placed at the top.'
+							'There''s an altar in the center of the room with various pots, several gold amulets and even some stone figures sitting on it. You continue looking around the room curiously, trying to figure out what it''s purpose was.'
+							'Looking closely at the altar, you notice a strange little amulet placed at the very top.'
 							act 'Examine the amulet':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/item_amulet.jpg"></center>'
-								'You pick up the strange amulet and examine it. <i>This is clearly very old</i> you think to yourself.'
-								'While holding the amulet, you realize that it''s getting warm, almost hot, before you feel heat coursing through your entire body and feel a surge of strength inside you. It''s like you just finished a long jog, but without the fatigue.'
-								'Igor enters the room with one of the scrolls in his hands. "Huh. Interesting little room," he observes while glancing over the altar. "Well, we have to make a decision: either we fill these catacombs up with cement or we let someone in to study them. Who knows what all this stuff is. Maybe it''s worth more than it looks?"'
+								'You pick up the strange amulet and examine it. <i>This is clearly very old</i>, you think to yourself.'
+								'While holding the amulet, you realize that it''s getting warm, almost hot, as you suddenly feel heat coursing through your entire body. You feel a surge of strength inside you. It''s like you just finished a long jog, but without the fatigue.'
+								'Igor enters the room with one of the scrolls in his hands. "Huh. Interesting little room," he says while glancing over the altar. "Well, we have to make a decision: either we fill these catacombs up with cement or we let someone into these rooms. Who knows what all this stuff is. Maybe it''s worth more than it looks?"'
 								act 'Consult you boss':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_cave_altar.jpg"></center>'
-									'"I''ve got to think about it and consult the director before we do anything," you reply and, without thinking about it, stuff the small amulet in your pocket.'
-									'"Well, one thing''s for sure. You won''t get reception down here. Let''s head outside," Igor replies while motioning for you to leave.'
+									'"I''ve got to think about it and consult the director before we do anything," you reply and put the small amulet in your pocket without a second thought.'
+									'"Well, one thing''s for sure. You won''t get reception down here. Let''s head back outside," Igor tells you.'
 									act 'Go back to the surface':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_working.jpg"></center>'
-										'You walk out of the strange chambers and climb back up the ladder to the surface.'
-										'"We must have been down there longer than I thought, it''s already late. There will only be security on site now, so there''s nothing we can do here until morning. You should go to the hotel." Igor informs you.'
-										'With a hasty goodbye, you make your way back to your car. <i>Damn!</i> you think. <i>Tomorrow''s going to be a stressful day.</i>'
-										act 'Go to the hotel': gt 'intro_city_tg', 'otelPRE'
+										'You walk out of the chambers and climb back up the ladder to the surface.'
+										'"We must have been down there longer than I thought," Igor says. "There''s nothing we can do here until the morning. You should go to the hotel."'
+										'With a hasty goodbye to Igor, you make your way back to your car. <i>Damn</i>, you think. <i>Tomorrow''s going to be a stressful day.</i>'
+										act 'Go to the hotel': gt 'intro_city_tg', 'hotelPRE'
 									end
 								end
 							end
@@ -140,67 +133,64 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roadPRE':
 	end
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'otelPRE':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'hotelPRE':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/6.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your trip to the hotel is quite uneventful compared to your tomb raiding adventure.'
-	'You park your car and go to the receptionist to get a room. There are only double rooms available, but it''s going on the company card, so that just means you''ll get a bigger room. You swipe the card and take your room key.'
+	'You park your car and go to the receptionist to get a room. You swipe your company card and take your room key.'
 	act 'Head upstairs to your room':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/7.jpg"></center>'
-		'Lying down on one of the beds, you start to wonder just who built that crypt and what it''s purpose was as your thoughts drift to the amulet you found. The way that thing is still making you feel wonderful baffles you.'
+		'Lying on one of the beds, you start wondering about who built that crypt and what it''s purpose was. Your thoughts drift to that amulet you found. The way that thing you touched half an hour ago is still making you feel wonderful, baffling you.'
 		act 'Call the director':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/7.jpg"></center>'
-			'You dial Roman''s number and after a few rings, he picks up. You inform him of what you found at the site: an ancient tomb, human bones, scrolls in a mysterious language and a strange altar.'
-			'Roman stays silent while you give your report. He decides that it would be best to stop the construction and tells you to stay and keep watch over the site until further notice.'
-			'You put the phone down. <i>Looks like this trip is going to last longer than expected,</i> you think to yourself.'
+			'You dial the director''s number and after a few rings, he picks up. You fill him in on the details of what you found at the site with Igor: an ancient tomb, human bones, scrolls in a mysterious language and the altar.'
+			'The director stays silent while you give your report. A few moments later, he decides that it would be best to stop the construction. He tells you to stay and keep watch over the site until further notice.'
+			'You put the phone away. <i>Looks like this trip is going to last longer than expected</i>, you think to yourself.'
 			act 'Go to bed':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/7.jpg"></center>'
-				'It doesn''t take you long to drift off to sleep'
-				*nl
-				'Images begin to form in your mind and you soon find yourself in a middle of a dream. The amulet stands before you and out of it comes a ghost of some sort. Before you even realize what you are doing, you find yourself staring deep into the ghost''s eyes, which turn into two Earths.'
-				'"Looking at the world most just see the mundane, but there is more to it, much more and now you see that too. You have the potential to shape it all, but first, you have company."'
-				*nl
-				'You suddenly return to your senses and become aware of not only the room around you, but that you''re not alone.'
+				'It doesn''t take you long to drift off to sleep. Images begin to form in your mind and you soon find yourself in a middle of a dream. The amulet stands before you and out of it comes a ghost of some sort. Before you even realize what you''re doing, you find yourself staring deep into the ghost''s eyes, which turn into two Earths.'
+				'"Looking at the world, most just see the mundane, but there''s more to it, much more. Now you see that too. You have the potential to shape it all, but first, you have company."'
+				'Your senses suddenly return and you''re aware of the hotel room around you, but you can tell you''re not alone.'
 				act 'Open your eyes':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_reinhold.jpg"></center>'
-					'As you open your eyes, you see a man standing in your room. He is wearing a long black coat and his face looks weary; he is unshaven and reminds you of scruffy Hollywood police detectives.'
-					'"Where is the amulet?" he asks as he approaches you.'
+					'As you open your eyes, you see a man standing in your room. He''s wearing a long black coat and his unshaven face looks weary; he reminds you of a scruffy police detective from a Hollywood film.'
+					'"Where is the amulet?" he demands as he approaches you.'
 					act 'Ask who he is':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_reinhold.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Who are you?" you ask, puzzled. The man''s sudden appearance and a sense you never knew you had tells you something about him; that he is not of this world.'
-						'"Don''t cause any problems now. Give me the amulet, close the construction site and all will be fine. After all, that place belongs to us," he says in a firm voice.'
+						'"Who are you?" you ask. The man''s sudden appearance and a sense you never knew you had tell you something about him; that he is not of this world.'
+						'"Give me the amulet, close the construction site, and all will be fine. After all, that place belongs to us," he says in a firm voice.'
+						*nl
 						'<i>Belongs to us?</i> His response leaves you bewildered, wondering who he is and what this is all about.'
-						'"Well, how about I give you a small taste of my power?" the man asks, and out of nowhere comes a burning desire to give him the amulet.'
+						'"How about I give you a small taste of my power?" the man asks, and out of nowhere comes a burning desire to give him the amulet.'
 						act 'Give him the amulet':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/7.jpg"></center>'
-							'You get out of the bed and give him the stone figure you had put in your pocket earlier. The man takes it, steps back, and without warning, something in his eyes begins to spin like a whirlwind, causing your own eyes to blur as if he was hypnotizing you. A few seconds later, your vision clears with the man having somehow disappeared into thin air.'
-							'You rub your eyes. "What the hell is going on here? Was that a dream? No, it can''t be. I wouldn''t walk around in a dream. I think," you say to yourself before checking your pocket. The amulet is indeed gone. You sit down on the bed, trying to make sense of what just happened.'
-							'While lost in thought, you hear a knock on the door. You get up to open the door, not even thinking why you would have visitors this late at night.'
+							'You get out of the bed and give him the stone figure you put in your pocket earlier. The man takes it, steps back, and without warning, something in his eyes begins to spin like a whirlwind, causing your own eyes to blur. A few seconds later, your vision clears with the man having somehow disappeared into thin air.'
+							'You rub your eyes. "What the hell is going on here? Was that a dream?. No, it can''t be. I wouldn''t walk around in a dream. I think," you say to no one in particular then check your pocket, the amulet is indeed gone. You sit down on the bed trying to make sense of what just happened.'
 							*nl
+							'While lost in thought, you hear a knock on the door. You get up to open the door, not even thinking why you would have visitors this late at night.'
 							'"...Who''s there?" you ask, still confused.'
 							'A woman''s voice responds that she''s the hotel receptionist and that she needs to talk to you about an urgent matter.'
 							act 'Answer the door':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-								'You open the door, but don''t recall the woman in front of you being at the reception desk; the woman from earlier didn''t have red hair and glasses. After entering the room she quickly examines the place, before locking her eyes on you.'
-								'"Mikhail, right?" she asks and you nod.'
-								'"You went to a certain place last night and took something very valuable, and very powerful..." she continues.'
+								'You open the door, but don''t recall the woman in front of you being at the reception desk; the woman from earlier didn''t have red hair and glasses. After entering the room, she quickly examines the place before locking her eyes on you.'
+								'"Mikhail, right?" she asks and you nod. "You went to a certain place last night and took something very valuable and <i>very</i> powerful."'
 								act 'Another one?':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-									'You sigh, irritated that not only have you been disturbed in the middle of the night, but these idiots apparently can''t even agree amongst themselves which one should be disturbing you.'
+									'You sigh, irritated that not only have you been disturbed in the middle of the night, but these idiots apparently cannot even agree among themselves which one of them should disturb you.'
 									'"Listen, you''re starting to bother me. That other guy already showed up asking for the damn amulet."'
 									'She looks at you with surprise. "What? Someone already came here? Who was it?"'
 									act 'Tell her':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-										'"It was some guy in a navy cloak with ginger hair and a light beard. He didn''t tell me his name. He already took the amulet."'
-										'The girl''s face drops. "Damn it!" She looks into your eyes. "Okay... Mikhail, we have to go somewhere else. There are too many people that might get hurt here. Gustav, come here!" The girl calls out to the corridor and a tall man enters the room.'
+										'"It was some man in a navy cloak with ginger hair and a light beard. He didn''t tell me his name. He already took the amulet," you answer.'
+										'The girl''s face drops. "Damn it!" She looks into your eyes. "Okay, we have to go somewhere else. There are too many people that might get hurt here. Gustav, come in here!" she calls out to the corridor and a tall man enters the room.'
 										$pcs_firstname = 'Mikhail'
 										$pcs_lastname = 'Ivanov'
 										age = 35
@@ -231,10 +221,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'otelPRE':
 										act 'Prepare to fight':
 											*clr & cla
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_gustav.jpg"></center>'
-											'The man has a large tattoo across the left side of his face. He too has red hair.'
+											'The man has a large tattoo across the left side of his face and also has red hair.'
 											$boy = 'Gustav'
 											gs 'fight','initFight',1
-
 											gs 'fight_npcdata', 'gustav'
 											fightEnding = 1
 
@@ -257,7 +246,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'tatianaPRE':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 	'You wake up in an unfamiliar room. Standing near you is the same red-haired girl that entered your hotel room.'
 	'"Ah, you''re awake," she chirps. "I told this jerk Gustav that he should have treated you more carefully, but he''s bad at listening. As a result, I had to use some magic to stabilize you. He almost knocked you out permanently."'
-	'"While you were unconscious, I did some research on you. Turns out the Amulet of Power passed to you. Must have happened when you touched it. Unfortunately, Reinhold, the guy in your room, he''s probably realized by now that the amulet no longer has the power and now he''s out to hunt you down."'
+	'"While you were unconscious, I did some research on you. Turns out the Amulet of Power passed to you. Must have happened when you touched it. Unfortunately, Reinhold, the guy in your room, has probably realized by now that the amulet no longer has the power and now he''s out to hunt you down."'
 	act 'What''s going on?':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
@@ -280,14 +269,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'tatianaPRE':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 				'"And who are you?" you ask.'
-				'The girl smiles. "Me? I''m Tatiana, a young mage with a keen interest in magical phenomenon. I specialize in the treatment of mutations, and magic relating to the body. I have little combat skill, so I rely on the services of Gustav to provide some muscle. He''s a Mutant due to magical exposure. It gives him unmatched physical strength and he is a great tracker."'
+				'The girl smiles. "Me? I''m Tatiana, a young mage with a keen interest in magical phenomenon. I specialize in the treatment of mutations, and magic relating to the body. I have little combat skill, so I rely on the services of Gustav to provide some muscle. He''s a Mutant due to magical exposure. It gives him unmatched physical strength, plus he''s a great tracker."'
 				'"The two of us run a detective agency for cover and money, but our real objective is studying magic and its effects."'
 				act 'What do you want from me?':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 					'"What do you want from me?" you ask.'
 					'"Well, the amulet obviously," Tatiana replies. "When I looked for you, I was hoping to get that object of power to study, but Reinhold got to you first. The amulet will now be pretty much useless anyway, as its power passed on to you."'
-					'"But this is not good for you. You may think that since you have the amulet''s power, you can do anything. But in reality, you''re helpless without the skill to use it. Reinhold easily overpowered your will and forced you to obey, and Gustav beat you like a puppy."'
+					'"But this is not good for you. You may think that since you have the amulet''s power, you can do anything, but in reality, you''re helpless without the skill to use it. Reinhold easily overpowered your will and forced you to obey, and Gustav beat you like a puppy."'
 					act 'What is this amulet?':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
@@ -355,38 +344,38 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleepPRE':
 	act 'Look at yourself':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/8.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Fuck," you say and immediately shut your mouth again. Your voice... it''s so feminine. Tatiana giggles.'
-		'"This is the first time I''ve changed someone''s gender, therefore I just <i>had</i> to see your reaction. Totally worth it. But you turned out beautiful. For a first try anyway. I should tell you that your body will change much faster than one of a natural born woman, for awhile, until it regulates itself to your new reality. That means it will be easier to gain and lose weight, muscle, stuff like that. All in all, you turned out quite well. You look pretty much exactly like her."' 
-		'"By the way, your new ''equipment'' down there is fully functional, so if you don''t want to be a mother, you should think about using contraceptives."'
+		'"Fuck," you say and immediately shut your mouth again. Your voice... It''s so feminine! Tatiana giggles.'
+		'"This is the first time I''ve changed someone''s gender, therefore I just <i>had</i> to see your reaction. Totally worth it, but you turned out beautiful. For a first try anyway. I should tell you that your body will change much faster than one of a natural born woman for a while until it regulates itself to your new reality. That means it will be easier to gain and lose weight, muscle, stuff like that. All in all, you turned out quite well. You look pretty much exactly like her."' 
+		'"By the way, your new... ''equipment'' down there is fully functional, so if you don''t want to be a mother, you should think about using contraceptives."'
 		*nl
-		'You glare at Tatiana. "So that makes me a woman now? On the outside maybe, but guess what? I''m still a 34 year old man on the inside!"'
-		'"Well, yes. I won''t argue about that." Tatiana agrees. "It''s your life and you decide what you do with it, but for the time being, you can''t go back to your old life, so deal with it. On a side note, I already took care of an alibi. Mikhail crashed his car into the pit and died, it''s on the news." Tatiana picks up a remote and turns on the TV.'
+		'You glare at Tatiana. "So that makes me a woman now?! On the outside maybe, but guess what? I''m still a 34 year old man on the inside!"'
+		'"Well, yes. I won''t argue about that," she agrees. "It''s your life and you decide what you do with it, but for the time being, you can''t go back to your old life, so deal with it. On a side note, I already took care of an alibi. Mikhail crashed his car into the pit and died, it''s on the news." She picks up a remote and turns the TV on.'
 
 		act 'Watch TV':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/9.jpg"></center>'
 			'There is a news report about a businessman who drove his car into a hole at a construction site. He died in hospital without regaining consciousness.'
-			'You look at Tatiana, bewildered. She has an enigmatic smile on her face. "Well, I''m still a magician and that''s something that I can do. Reinhold has definitely lost the trail. The body in that car was a perfect copy of your old self, from your absorbed amulet energy down to the placement of every single hair."'
-			*nl
-			'"Anyways, here are your new legal documents, including a new passport. Starting today, you are <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, an 18 year old girl who lives in the city. She grew up in Pavlovsk, with her mother, step father, sister and half brother. She just recently rented a apartment in the city after graduating from the Secondary school in Pavlovsk, tomorrow is moving day. Luckily for us she kept a journal about her life, notes about her family and friends, as well as many other things. I suggest you study it and memorize it, but to help you out she was admitted to the hospital with a minor head injury. I made sure her family was informed she has some memory issues so it should help with you fitting in and acting different than she did. But learn to act like her as quickly as you can, so you don''t bring unwanted attention to yourself.'
+			'You look at Tatiana, bewildered. She has an enigmatic smile on her face. "I''m a magician and that''s something I can do. Reinhold has definitely lost the trail. The body in that car was a perfect copy of your old self, from your absorbed amulet energy down to the placement of every single hair."'
+			'"Anyway, here are your new legal documents, including a new passport. Starting today, you are <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, an 18 year old girl who lives in the city. She grew up in Pavlovsk with her mother, stepfather, sister and half brother. She just recently rented a apartment in the city after graduating from school and tomorrow is moving day."' 
+			'She hands you a notebook. "Luckily for us, she kept a journal about her life, notes about her family and friends, as well as many other things. I suggest you study it and memorize it, but to help you out, I fabricated a story that she was admitted to the hospital with a head injury and has some memory issues. This should help with you fitting in and acting different than she did, but learn to act like her as quickly as you can so you don''t bring unwanted attention to yourself."'
 			*nl
-			'This is a lot for you to take in and it takes a moment for you to grasp it all. "Wait what about the real <<$pcs_firstname>>?"'
-			'She gives you a sad smile. "She was killed recently, that is why I picked her. No one knows she died so I was able to fix it so no one will know and give you a new life to hide in. I know it is not ideal and whenever we can fix this and change you back we can let her rest, think of it this way you are giving her family extra time with her."'
+			'This is a lot for you to take in and it takes a moment for you to grasp it all. "Wait, what about the real <<$pcs_firstname>>?"'
+			'She gives you a sad smile. "She was killed. No one knows she died and nobody will know, giving you a new life to hide in. I know it''s not ideal and whenever we can fix this and change you back, we can let her rest. Just think of it this way; you''re giving her family extra time with her."'
 			*nl
-			'You sigh and shake your head, this is all so much to take in, you don''t even know what to say. Then she adds "At least she had an apartment to call home. Here are the keys, she didn''t have much in her apartment yet, but study her journal, learn it like your life depends on it, because in a way it does. Now get up, you''ve got to go to your new home and start a new life."'
-			'Gustav, the redhead with a tattoo on his face, enters the room. He looks at you. "Come on, I''ll take you."'
+			'You sigh and shake your head. You don''t even know what to say. "Here are the keys to her apartment.Study her journal and memorize it like your life depends on it, because in a way it does. Now get up, you''ve got to go to your new home and start a new life."'
+			'Gustav enters the room and looks at you. "Come on, I''ll take you."'
 			act 'Go with Gustav':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_gustav.jpg"></center>'
-				'Gustav silently takes you to the garage and you enter his black jeep. Gustav gets behind the wheel and drives you into the city. You silently speculate about what to do now.'
+				'Gustav silently takes you to the garage and you enter his black jeep. Gustav gets behind the wheel and drives you into the city as you silently speculate about what to do now.'
 				'After a few minutes, while keeping his eyes on the road, Gustav speaks. "I''m sorry I beat you up. I have trouble controlling myself during a fight. You had a large build and for a second I thought you might be dangerous, so I ended up hitting you with my full force."'
 				*nl
-				'You look at him. "Forget it. Listen Gustav... What do I do now?"'
-				'Gustav nods. "Well, I would advise you to start by buying food, all sorts of washing powders, laundry detergent and dishes. There are a few supplies already in the apartment, but they''ll only last you a day or two. There''s no TV either. Then get a job. Not far from your new home is a small café. If I remember correctly, there was a vacant waitress position there not too long ago. You should talk to the owner about the job. Don''t forget to monitor your health, keep your mood up and have a clear mind."'
-				'"Your mind is very weak. If you don''t take care of yourself you will go crazy. You need to eat well, sleep regularly and have fun. Don''t become depressed or else you''ll end up in a madhouse. Don''t go looking for Tatiana; you won''t find her. Secondly, if we need to contact you, we will find you."'
+				'You look at him. "Forget about it. What do I do now?"'
+				'Gustav nods. "Well, I would advise you to start by buying food, all sorts of washing powders, laundry detergent and dishes. There are a few supplies already in the apartment, but they''ll only last you a day or two, so get a job. If I remember correctly, there was a vacant waitress position at a nearby cafe not too long ago."'
+				'"Also, your mind is very weak. If you don''t take care of yourself, you''ll go crazy. You need to eat well, sleep regularly and have fun. Don''t become depressed or else you''ll end up in a madhouse. Don''t go looking for Tatiana; you won''t find her. Secondly, if we need to contact you, we will find you."'
 				*nl
-				'You arrive at some old Soviet era buildings in Pavlovsk. Gustav stops the car and points a finger at the entrance. "You''re in apartment 7 on the second floor. Tatiana already gave you the key, so go. Don''t just give up. Not everyone gets an entirely new chance at life. Tatiana and I will keep an eye out for you."'
-				'"Also study that journal, try to fit in and make the best of your new life." You just nod, not knowing what to say you open the car door to get out.'
+				'You arrive at some old Soviet era buildings in Pavlovsk. Gustav stops the car and points a finger at the entrance. "You''re in apartment 7 on the second floor. Tatiana already gave you the key, so go. "You''re in apartment 7 on the second floor. Tatiana already gave you the key, so go. Don''t give up. Not everyone gets an entirely new chance at life."'
+				'"Also study that journal and try to fit in and make the best of your new life." You just nod, not knowing what to say as you open the car door and get out.'
 				act 'Get out of the car':
 					gs 'intro_initialization_city'
 					*clr & cla
@@ -394,7 +383,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleepPRE':
 					showobjs 1
 					gs 'obj_din', 'old'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/start_tf.jpg"></center>'
-					'You are exhausted and trying to take in all the strange things you''ve learnt and barely speak to anyone at home. You remember your Mom sitting you down and making you eat something before you get an early night''s sleep.'
+					'You''re exhausted and are still struggling to take in all the strange things you''ve learnt, so decide to get an early night''s sleep.'
 					act 'Sleep': gt 'intro_city', 'city_intro'
 				end
 			end

locations/intro_sg_tg.qsrc

@@ -58,7 +58,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_2_name':
 
 	act 'Her name was ...':
 		$pcs_firstname = 'Svetlana'
-		$pcs_lastname = 'Lebedev'
+		$pcs_lastname = 'Lebedeva'
 		$pcs_nickname = 'Sveta'
 
 		!!Player names are set here
@@ -68,7 +68,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_2_name':
 		killvar '$temp_firstname'
 
 		$temp_lastname = '<<$pcs_lastname>>'
-		$pcs_lastname = input("What is the girls name? (Leave blank for Lebedev)")
+		$pcs_lastname = input("What is the girls name? (Leave blank for Lebedeva)")
 		if $pcs_lastname = '':$pcs_lastname = '<<$temp_lastname>>'
 		killvar '$temp_lastname'
 
@@ -84,14 +84,14 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_3':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/4_csb/17.jpg"></center>'
-	'Her name was <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, <<$pcs_nickname>> for short. You don''t know why, but she seemed to liked you. Maybe she was as lonely as you were. You couldn''t believe your luck.'
+	'Her name was <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, or <<$pcs_nickname>> for short. You don''t know why, but she seemed to liked you. Maybe she was as lonely as you were. You couldn''t believe your luck.'
 	'You spent the next few weeks messaging back and forth. <<$pcs_nickname>> told you all about her life, as well as her likes and dislikes.'
 
 	act 'Continue': gt 'intro_sg_tg', 'intro_4'
 
 	act 'Re-enter her name(s)':
 		$pcs_firstname = 'Svetlana'
-		$pcs_lastname = 'Lebedev'
+		$pcs_lastname = 'Lebedeva'
 		$pcs_nickname = 'Sveta'
 
 		!!Player names are set here
@@ -101,7 +101,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_3':
 		killvar '$temp_firstname'
 
 		$temp_lastname = '<<$pcs_lastname>>'
-		$pcs_lastname = input("What is the girls name? (Leave blank for Lebedev)")
+		$pcs_lastname = input("What is the girls name? (Leave blank for Lebedeva)")
 		if $pcs_lastname = '':$pcs_lastname = '<<$temp_lastname>>'
 		killvar '$temp_lastname'
 
@@ -131,7 +131,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_4':
 		$npc_nickname['A29'] = '<<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>'
 		$temp_nickname = $npc_nickname['A29']
 
-		$npc_nickname['A29'] = input('<center>What name does she use to address her mother by?<br>Mother (default), Mum, Mom, Mama, etc.</center>')
+		$npc_nickname['A29'] = input('<center>What name does she use to address her mother?<br>Mother (default), Mum, Mom, Mama, etc.</center>')
 		if $npc_nickname['A29'] = '':$npc_nickname['A29'] = '<<$temp_nickname>>'
 		killvar '$temp_nickname'
 
@@ -447,7 +447,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_8':
 							act 'Oh god...':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/4_csb/11.jpg"></center>'
-								'Shock and blood loss set in, causing your vision to start to black out. So this is how you die. Moments before you pass out, you swear you can hear the sound of crunching bones and see a flash of bright red hair.'
+								'Shock and blood loss set in, causing your vision to start blacking out. So this is how you die. Moments before you pass out, you swear you can hear the sound of crunching bones and see a flash of bright red hair.'
 								act '...am I dying?': gt 'intro_sg_tg', 'intro_9'
 							end
 						end
@@ -522,20 +522,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_9':
 							'"Hold on, I''ll get to that. Let me start from the beginning," the girl says. "Magic exists and is real. Millenia ago, the world was not the same. The fae creatures who possess natural magic lived in balance, but the succubus were free to breed with whomever they wished."'
 							'"They bred with humans, and with that human magicians were born. The Sidhe, the most powerful of the fae, feared the increasing number of human magicians and cast a very powerful spell to bind the succubus to them, preventing either from being able to reproduce without the other."'
 							'"All magicians have some of that original fae blood in their bodies. It is through that that they are able to connect with the world of magic."'
-							'The redhead adjusts her glasses. "Most of the world simply ignores magic, or are protected from it by magic''s natural desire to remain hidden."'
+							'She adjusts her glasses. "Most of the world simply ignores magic, or are protected from it by magic''s natural desire to remain hidden."'
 
 							act 'Continue':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 								'"But last night there was a powerful burst of magical energy, strong enough to be clearly felt by any with magical connections. Can you guess where this surge came from? Yeah, that cave you found. Apparently the surge occurred when you opened the seal to the archive. Anyway, that was when we started to search. That source of power is desired by many, but it is extremely dangerous and in the wrong hands could cause untold horrors."'
-								'She stops for a few seconds for you to process that information. It seems really far fetched.'
+								'She stops for a few seconds for you to process the information. It seems really far fetched.'
 								'"A man named Reinhold wanted to prevent the amulet being misused, so he went out to find it. Of course, the moment you saw him, you dropped the amulet and bolted into the woods. He picked it up but didn''t bother to check you over. Unfortunately, he''s probably realized by now that the amulet no longer has the power and now he''ll be out to hunt you down."'
 
 								act 'So, the whole world is just an illusion?':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-									'"So magic exists and is used by all these people and creatures. But the rest of us just don''t see it, or we convince ourselves it didn''t happen?"'
-									'The girl nods. "Yes. You''re a quick study. Machines, apartments, television and the Internet. All this really does exist and is in the form in which people see it. But if I say, hurl a fireball, then people might see that I threw a grenade or shot a flamethrower. The average human mind can''t process magic, so it blocks it out as a way to protect the person from going crazy."'
+									'"So magic exists and is used by all these people and creatures, but the rest of us just don''t see it, or we convince ourselves it didn''t happen?"'
+									'The girl nods. "Yes. You''re a quick study. Machines, apartments, television and the Internet. All of these really does exist and is in the form in which people see it. But if I say, hurl a fireball, then people might see that I threw a grenade or shot a flamethrower. The average human mind can''t process magic, so it blocks it out as a way to protect the person from going crazy."'
 									'"Hence such things as little green men, UFOs, poltergeists and spontaneous combustion are from when people encounter a difficult-to-hide phenomenon and their minds come to a flawed conclusion. In some cases, a person''s mind can''t cope with the spell they witness and they are driven insane."'
 
 									act 'And who are you?':
@@ -564,7 +564,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_9':
 													*clr & cla
 													'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 													'"Of course there was another way. I could have just stopped your heart and let your power dissolve into nature. You would have died though. Reinhold might be the kind of person to kill you to save others, but I didn''t want to kill you right after saving you. Plus, with my magic, I was able to take this risk. Sure, maybe with more time doing research I could have worked out another solution, but I didn''t have a lot of time."'
-													'"Of course I couldn''t just leave a newly created teenage girl without parents or a home. So I decided to kill two birds with one stone. Instead of just turning you into any old girl, I turned you into the girl you were with."'
+													'"Of course I couldn''t just leave a newly created teenage girl without parents or a home, so I decided to kill two birds with one stone. Instead of just turning you into any old girl, I turned you into the girl you were with."'
 
 													act 'What?':
 														*clr & cla
@@ -572,22 +572,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_9':
 														'Startled, you reach up to your face, tracing out the features. You didn''t get a chance to become familiar with her face, but it feels about right. This whole time, <<$pcs_nickname>>''s death didn''t feel real, like she was still around somehow. Maybe it''s because you now <i>are<i> <<$pcs_nickname>>, but even now you don''t feel a sense of loss or guilt.'
 														'"Having a template to work off of really helped. Not even a geneticist could tell you two apart; you are identical from your fingerprints down to your DNA. Of course, that means your new ''equipment'' down there is fully functional as well, so if you don''t want to be a mommy, you should start thinking about contraceptives. You should probably also stay away from any male relatives if you don''t want to end up with a kid with eleven toes or something."'
 														'You angrily glare at Tatiana. "So you think I''m a girl now? On the outside maybe, but guess what? I''m still a boy on the inside!"'
-														'"Well, yes. I won''t argue about that." Tatiana agrees. "You can decide what you want to do with your life, but you might want to play the part of <<$pcs_firstname>> until graduation at least. On a side note, I already took care of an alibi. Yesterday, "<<$pcs_firstname>>" was found half-dead on the edge of the woods while the leftovers of Mikhail''s body were found deeper in. It''s in the news." With these words, she tosses a newspaper onto the bed, an article circled out.'
+														'"Well, yes. I won''t argue about that." Tatiana agrees. "You can decide what you want to do with your life, but you might want to play the part of <<$pcs_firstname>> until graduation at least. On a side note, I already took care of an alibi. Yesterday, "<<$pcs_firstname>>" was found half-dead on the edge of the woods while the leftovers of Mikhail''s body were found deeper in. It''s in the news." She tosses a newspaper onto the bed with an article circled out.'
 
 														act 'Read the newspaper':
 															*clr & cla
 															'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/4_csb/13.jpg"></center>'
-															'There is a news report about a teenage boy, whose remains were found by a group of hunters half-eaten by wolves.'
-															'You give Tatiana a bewildered stare. She has an enigmatic smile on her face. "Well, I am a magician. That''s something that I can do. Reinhold has definitely lost the trail; there''s no reason he should suspect the power been passed to a girl. You took <<$pcs_firstname>>''s place, and she took yours. The body in the woods was a perfect copy of your old self, from your absorbed amulet energy down to the placement of every single hair."'
-															'"Anyways, your ''mother'' will be by in a few hours to pick you up; she thinks that you''ve got some amnesia from a head injury and mental trauma from seeing your ''boyfriend'' get eaten alive by wolves, so you should probably be covered for any slip-ups. Just play the part of the traumatized little schoolgirl and it should be all good. Have fun."'
+															'There is a news report about a teenage boy whose remains were found by a group of hunters half-eaten by wolves.'
+															'You give Tatiana a bewildered stare. She has an enigmatic smile on her face. "Well, I am a magician. That''s something I can do. Reinhold has definitely lost the trail; there''s no reason he should suspect the power been passed to a girl. You took <<$pcs_firstname>>''s place, and she took yours. The body in the woods was a perfect copy of your old self, from your absorbed amulet energy down to the placement of every single hair."'
+															'"Anyway, your ''mother'' will be by in a few hours to pick you up; she thinks that you''ve got some amnesia from a head injury and mental trauma from seeing your ''boyfriend'' get eaten alive by wolves, so you should probably be covered for any slip-ups. Just play the part of the traumatized little schoolgirl and it should be all good. Have fun."'
 															'She gets up and heads to the door, opening it up to reveal a tall man with red hair and face tattoos. "Come on, Gustav, let''s go." The pair disappear into the hall, leaving you with your thoughts.'
 
 															act 'Think about your situation':
 																*clr & cla
 																'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/4_csb/14.jpg"></center>'
-																'You aren''t sure what to think.'
-																'On the one hand, you''ve lost your manhood forever. You''ll have to deal with skirts and periods and makeup and babies and all other sorts of girly things.'
-																'On the other, you''ve been granted a clean slate. No more beatings, no threats of becoming homeless, and you''re gaining the family you never had. Plus, you''re going to be able to spy on girls in the locker room without them screaming this time.'
+																'You aren''t sure what to think. On the one hand, you''ve lost your manhood forever. You''ll have to deal with skirts and periods and makeup and babies and all other sorts of girly things. On the other, you''ve been granted a clean slate. No more beatings, no threats of becoming homeless, and you''re gaining the family you never had. Plus, you''re going to be able to spy on girls in the locker room without them screaming this time.'
 																'Whining about the situation isn''t going to change it, so you resolve to deal with it one day at a time, living your new life as <<$pcs_firstname>> "<<$pcs_nickname>>" <<$pcs_lastname>>.'
 																!! default start
 																act 'Start at the end of August':
@@ -635,7 +633,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro_end':
 	*nl
 	'You can choose from two starting locations:'
 	*nl
-	'In the Pavlovsk start you awaken at your parent''s home in the provincial town of Pavlovsk <i>(Recommended for new players)</i>. In the Gadukino start you are visiting your grandparent''s house in the small farming village of Gadukino.'
+	'In the Pavlovsk start, you awaken at your parent''s home in the provincial town of Pavlovsk <i>(Recommended for new players)</i>. In the Gadukino start, you are visiting your grandparent''s house in the small farming village of Gadukino.'
 
 	act 'Pavlovsk Start': gt 'intro_sg_tg', 'pav_start'
 	act 'Gadukino Start': gt 'intro_sg_tg', 'gad_start'
@@ -646,7 +644,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pav_start':
 	'<center><h2>Pavlovsk</h2></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_pavlovsk.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'<center>A provincial town in a rural area of Russia, which looks much like all the other towns in the region. Population: 15000.</center>'
+	'<center>A provincial town in a rural area of Russia, which looks much like all the other towns in the region. Population: 15,000.</center>'
 
 	act 'Continue': $starting_location = 'pavlovsk' & gt 'intro_sg_tg', 'game_start'
 	act 'Change location': gt 'intro_sg_tg', 'gad_start'
@@ -657,7 +655,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gad_start':
 	'<center><h2>Gadukino</h2></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_gadukino.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'<center>A small farming village with just as many rickety wooden houses dot the landscape as ruins. The village has seen better days.</center>'
+	'<center>A small farming village with just as many rickety wooden houses dotting the landscape as ruins. The village has seen better days.</center>'
 
 	act 'Continue': $starting_location = 'gadukino' & gt 'intro_sg_tg', 'game_start'
 	act 'Change location': gt 'intro_sg_tg', 'pav_start'
@@ -674,7 +672,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'game_start':
 		'Over the next week, you slowly became accustomed to your new life. You aren''t used to being a girl just yet, but you''ve come to think of yourself as <<$pcs_nickname>> instead of Mikhail, and <<$pcs_nickname>>''s family as your own.'
 		'There were a few incidents where you acted in some decidedly non-feminine ways. Luckily Tatiana''s alibi has proved helpful here as well, covering your mistakes.'
 		*nl
-		'You''ve noticed some other mental changes apart from just thinking of yourself as <<$pcs_firstname>>. Perhaps it is a result of your new gender, but with your new body has come an attraction towards men. You are a little unsettled by these changes, but you can''t feel repulsed by these new desires any more than you could have been repulsed for finding girls attractive before.'
+		'You''ve noticed some other mental changes apart from just thinking of yourself as <<$pcs_firstname>>. Perhaps it''s a result of your new gender, but with your new body has come an attraction towards men. You''re a little unsettled by these changes, but you can''t feel repulsed by these new desires any more than you could have been repulsed for finding girls attractive before.'
 		'The first time you saw a man''s penis was a mind-opening experience, awakening unfamiliar feelings. Luckily it seems that you''ve retained your attraction towards women, making your changing sexuality easier to deal with. So far, you haven''t had the time to really explore a woman''s pleasure.'
 
 		act 'Continue':

locations/intro_uni.qsrc

@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mom_intro':
 		gs 'npc_relationship', 'set', 'A29', '70'
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big29.jpg"></center>'
-		'"I know, I know. Don''t worry so much <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>. You got me here. I''ll do the rest."'
+		'"I know, I know. Don''t worry so much, <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>! You got me here. I''ll do the rest."'
 		'She gives you a hug before going to stand over your pile of stuff to keep an eye on it.'
 
 		act 'Go on a tour': gt 'intro_uni', 'tour_intro'

locations/intro_uni_m.qsrc

@@ -7,7 +7,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_gadukino.jpg"></center>'
-	'After your last year of school, your grades were good enough for you to get into university. Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> convinced you to spend the day at your grandparents farm in the village of Gadukino, but there''s nothing to do here but watch animals graze and help your grandparents, which does earn you some extra cash, even if it''s very tedious.'
+	'After your last year of school, your grades were good enough for you to get into university. Your mother convinced you to spend the day at your grandparents farm in the village of Gadukino, but there''s nothing to do here but watch animals graze and help your grandparents, which does earn you some extra cash, even if it''s very tedious.'
 	act 'Take a walk':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_woods.jpg"></center>'
@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			act 'Take a break':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_tunnel_1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You take a seat on a large stone in the ruins and take a breath. You''re starting to get hungry, and stomp your foot in frustration. The floor suddenly gives way and you desperately try to hold on to something, but everything in reach comes loose and falls down the hole with you. You feel slightly dazed, but after a quick check you seem to be uninjured. You seem to be in an underground chamber of some sort and looking up, you see that climbing out is not an option.' 
+				'You take a seat on a large stone in the ruins and take a breath. You''re starting to get hungry and stomp your foot in frustration. The floor suddenly gives way and you desperately try to hold on to something, but everything in reach comes loose and falls down the hole with you. You feel slightly dazed, but after a quick check you seem to be uninjured. You seem to be in an underground chamber of some sort and looking up, you see that climbing out is not an option.' 
 				'You spot an old gate, but it''s either locked or rusted shut. The only way out seems to be the tunnel on the other side of the chamber. You pull out your phone and turn on the flashlight before heading into the tunnel.'
 				act 'Follow the tunnel':
 					*clr & cla
@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							act 'Find a way out':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_working.jpg"></center>'
-								'You follow the passage and find yourself in a construction site. There are several <b>keep out</b> signs visible from here. Shit.'
+								'You follow the passage and find yourself in a construction site. There are several <b>KEEP OUT</b> signs visible from here. Shit.'
 								act 'Sneak out':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_road.jpg"></center>'
@@ -69,11 +69,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wakeup':
 		'"They bred with humans and so human magicians were born. The Sidhe, as the most powerful of the fae, feared the increasing number of human magicians and cast a very powerful spell to bind the succubus to them. This prevented one from being able to reproduce without the other."'
 		'"All magicians have some of that original fae blood in their bodies and it is through that that they are able to connect with the world of magic."'
 		*nl
-		'The redhead adjusts her glasses. "Most of the world simply ignores magic or are protected from it by magic''s natural desire to remain hidden, but last night there was a powerful burst of magical energy, strong enough to be clearly seen by any with magical connections. Can you guess where this surge came from? Yeah, that cave you found. Apparently the surge occurred when you opened the seal to the archive. Anyway, that was when we started to search. That source of power is desired by many, but it is extremely dangerous and in the wrong hands could do untold horrors."'
+		'She adjusts her glasses. "Most of the world simply ignores magic or are protected from it by magic''s natural desire to remain hidden, but last night there was a powerful burst of magical energy, strong enough to be clearly seen by any with magical connections. Can you guess where this surge came from? Yeah, that cave you found. Apparently the surge occurred when you opened the seal to the archive. Anyway, that was when we started to search. That source of power is desired by many, but it is extremely dangerous and in the wrong hands could do untold horrors."'
 		'She stops for a few seconds for you to process the information. It seems really far fetched.'
 		'"Reinhold wants to prevent the amulet being misused. He is tasked with maintaining order and will search for you."'
 
-		act 'So, the whole world is just an illusion?':
+		act 'So the whole world is just an illusion?':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 			'"So magic exists and is used by all these people and creatures, but the rest of us just don''t see it, or convince ourselves it didn''t happen?"'
@@ -91,7 +91,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wakeup':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 					'"What do you want from me?" you ask.'
-					'"Well, the amulet obviously," Tatiana replies. "When I looked for you, I was hoping to get that object of power to study, but the power transferred to you first. The amulet will now be pretty much useless."'
+					'"The amulet. Obviously," she replies. "When I looked for you, I was hoping to get that object of power to study, but the power transferred to you first. The amulet will now be pretty much useless."'
 					'"But this is not good for you. You may think that since you have the amulet''s power, you can do anything. But in reality, you''re helpless without the skill to use it. Its power already knocked you out and I had to use magic to stabilize you."'
 
 					act 'What is this amulet?':
@@ -106,13 +106,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wakeup':
 						act 'So what should I do?':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-							'"Lay low for now. Get on with your life. We''ll contact you if anything comes up. Gustav here will drop you off at your apartment. Don''t worry I already let your parents and grandparent know you decided to head back to your apartment in Pavlovsk."'
+							'"Lay low for now. Get on with your life. We''ll contact you if anything comes up. Gustav here will drop you off at your apartment. Don''t worry, I already let your parents and grandparents know you decided to head back to your apartment in Pavlovsk."'
 							act 'Follow Gustav':
 								money = 5000
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/2_sg/start_sg.jpg"></center>'
-								'You give Gustav directions to your apartment building. Half an hour later, he drops you off in front of your apartment building in Pavlovsk. You head inside and feeling exhausted after the days events you go to your room and collapse on the bed, quickly falling asleep.'
-								act '<center><b>Done</b></center>': gt 'intro_uni', 'intro'
+								'You give Gustav directions to your apartment building. Half an hour later, he drops you off in front of your apartment building in Pavlovsk. You head inside and, feeling exhausted after the days events, you go to your room and collapse on the bed, quickly falling asleep.'
+								act 'Done': gt 'intro_uni', 'intro'
 							end
 						end
 					end
@@ -135,7 +135,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'welcome_intro':
 	gs 'obj_din', 'old'
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/6_uni/uni_start.jpg"></center>'
-	'Welcome to the Cursed Schoolgirl version! Guide <<$pcs_nickname>> through the many challenges of life at university. Manage coursework, a job and relationships with the people you meet on your journey.'
+	'Welcome to the Cursed University Student version! Guide <<$pcs_nickname>> through the many challenges of life at university. Manage coursework, a job and relationships with the people you meet on your journey.'
 
 	act 'Start the game': gt 'uni_grounds', 'main'
 end

locations/intro_uni_tg.qsrc

@@ -12,59 +12,48 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Apartment</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You wake up to the sound of your alarm clock. You hear Luda, your wife, mumbling next to you, "Don''t want to, it''s too early." She pulls her blanket up and rolls over. You reach over and turn the clock off.'
+	'You wake up to the sound of your alarm clock. You hear Luda, your wife, mumbling next to you, "Don''t want to, it''s too early." She pulls her blanket up and rolls over as you reach over and turn the clock off.'
 	*nl
 	'<i>There are days when I just want to keep on sleeping</i>, you think to yourself. <i>But I can''t, not today.</i>'
 	act 'Go to the bathroom':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/mikhail_2.jpg"></center>'
-		'Quietly, so that you don''t wake up your daughter, you go to the bathroom and take care of your morning routine.'
+		'Taking care not to wake up your daughter, you quietly head to the bathroom and take care of your morning routine.'
 		act 'Leave the apartment':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/3.jpg"></center>'
-			'In a parking lot near your house sits your car. You unlock it with the remote key and climb in.'
+			'Your car sits in a parking lot near your house. You unlock it with the remote key and climb in.'
 			act 'Go to work':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/4.jpg"></center>'
-				'You turn the key and the engine roars to life. As you drive to work the roads are filled with traffic, but it''s the morning rush hour, so it''s no surprise. You drive for what feels like an eternity, give or take an hour, but you eventually reach the office. The music on the radio was pleasant, at least.'
+				'You turn the key and the engine roars to life. You drive for what feels like an eternity through the morning rush hour, but you eventually reach the office. At least the music on the radio was pleasant.'
 				act 'Park at the office':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/5.jpg"></center>'
-					'You pull into a parking lot near the building and manage to find a good spot. You greet the security guard on your way in to the building, and then go upstairs to your office. Shortly after you sit down at your desk and boot up your computer, your boss''s secretary comes in and hands you a folder with several travel documents.'
-					*nl
-					'"Am I going on a business trip or something?" you ask her.'
-					*nl
-					'"Yes, the director said it had something to do with a construction project, out in the middle of nowhere, but that''s pretty much all I know," Oksana says.'
-					*nl
-					'After she leaves, you read over the travel documents and fill them out. Time to go to the director.'
+					'You pull into a parking lot near the building and manage to find a good spot. You greet the security guard on your way into the building, then go upstairs to your office. Shortly after you sit down at your desk and boot up your computer, your boss''s secretary comes in and hands you a folder with several travel documents.'
+					'"Am I going on a business trip or something?" you ask.'
+					'"Yes, the director said it had something to do with a construction project out in the middle of nowhere, but that''s pretty much all I know," she says.'
+					'After she leaves, you read over the travel documents and fill them out before heading to the director''s office.'
 					act 'Go and see your boss':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_roman.jpg"></center>'
-						'You head into the directors'' office, greet him and hand him the papers to sign. The director, Roman Gromov, scans through the text before signing off on it with a broad, sweeping stroke.'
-						*nl
-						'"Ms. Glavbukh is in her office. Go get some travel money while I make a few calls. We''ll discuss your trip when you get back."'
+						'You head into the directors'' office, greet him and hand him the papers to sign. The director scans through the text before signing off on it with a broad, sweeping stroke.'
+						'"Ms. Glavbukh is in her office. Get some travel money while I make a few calls. We''ll discuss your trip when you get back."'
 						act 'Go to the chief accountant':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_marina.jpg"></center>'
-							'Marina is indeed already in her office. After filing your signed travel documents, she grumbles about antiquated systems as she counts out the money.'
+							'The accountant is already in her office. After filing your signed travel documents, she grumbles about antiquated systems as she counts out the money.'
 							act 'Return to the director':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_roman.jpg"></center>'
-								'Roman is busy talking on the phone when you re-enter the his office, he gestures for you to sit down on one of the chairs across from him.'
-								*nl
-								'"Yes, I understand... yes. I will send Mikhail over ASAP, he''ll represent me... Yes... Tell your men to work on some other parts of the project in the meantime. Have Igor guard the pit and let no one make any fuss, and make sure nobody gets wind of this and, you know, try to halt the construction... Okay, we''ll keep in touch."'
-								*nl
-								'Roman hangs up and turns to you.'
-								*nl
-								'"Last night, while excavating for the foundations, the workers stumbled upon something; one of the excavators dug into a hollow space of some sort. Luckily Igor was on site and he halted the excavation.'
-								*nl
-								'"It''s not clear what exactly it is, yet. Maybe an abandoned bunker or a cave. But in any case, if there are any more chambers under the foundation, we might not be able to build on the land. So what I want you to do, is to go to the construction site, figure out exactly what the problem is and solve this whole mess as quickly as possible."'
+								'The director is busy talking on the phone when you re-enter his office and he gestures for you to sit on one of the chairs across from him.'
+								'"Yes, I understand... Yes. I''ll send Mikhail over ASAP to represent me... Yes... Tell your men to work on some other parts of the project in the meantime. Have Igor guard the pit and make sure nobody gets wind of this... Okay, we''ll keep in touch."'
+								'He hangs up and turns to you. "The workers stumbled upon something last night; one of the excavators dug into a hollow space of some sort. It''s not clear exactly what it is, but if there are any more chambers under the foundation, we might not be able to build on the land. I want you to go to the construction site, figure out exactly what the problem is and solve this whole mess as quickly as possible."'
 								act 'Remind him of the correct procedures':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_roman.jpg"></center>'
 									'"Firstly we need to talk to..." you start to say, but are quickly interrupted by your boss.'
-									*nl
-									'"Mikhail, do you realize what''s at stake here? We''re near the end of our credit line, we still have unfinalized agreements on the project''s contract, and we already have guys digging the pit. If there is a too big hole under the foundation, and we can''t build on the site, that could bankrupt the company. So this mysterious structure must be addressed immediately and I have to hold the fort here and keep a lid on things."'
+									'"Mikhail, do you realize what''s at stake here? We''re near the end of our credit line, we still have unfinalized agreements on the project''s contract, and we already have guys digging the pit. If we can''t build on the site, that could bankrupt the company. This mysterious structure must be addressed immediately and I have to hold the fort here and keep a lid on things."'
 									act 'Doesn''t look like you have a choice': gt 'intro_uni_tg', 'roadPRE'
 								end
 							end
@@ -80,83 +69,62 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roadPRE':
 	music_loop = 0
 	CLOSE ALL
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/4.jpg"></center>'
-	'You leave the office and from your car phone your wife Luda. You explain the situation to her and as soon as you finish the call, you drive off to the construction site.'
+	'You leave the office and phone your wife in the car. You explain the situation to her and drive off to the construction site as soon as you hang up.'
 	act 'Drive':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_working.jpg"></center>'
-		'You''ve been on the highway for hours before you arrive at the town near the site, leaving you feeling tired. But before you can check into a hotel and get some sleep, you need to get an understanding of the magnitude of the problem you''re dealing with. You follow the directions to the site. Igor calls on the way and tells you that you won''t have to go through a security check.'
-		*nl
-		'You arrive and park your car at the site. You see Igor waving at you from a distance and you walk up to him.'
+		'You''ve been on the highway for hours when you arrive at the town near the site. Before you can check into a hotel and get some sleep, you need to get an understanding of the magnitude of the problem you''re dealing with, so you follow the directions to the site. Igor calls on the way and tells you that you won''t have to go through a security check.'
+		'You soon arrive and park your car at the site. You see Igor waving at you from a distance and walk up to him.'
 		act 'Greet Igor':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_igor.jpg"></center>'
-			'Igor greets you. He is obviously concerned about the situation and without delay leads you to the pit''s fenced-off entrance. It rained earlier so the ground is all muddy, you''re going to have to clean your shoes when you get back to the hotel.'
-			*nl
-			'"The ladder''s over there," Igor informs you, while pointing to your left.'
-			*nl
+			'Igor is clearly concerned about the situation and quickly leads you to the pit''s fenced-off entrance. "The ladder''s over there," he informs you while pointing to your left.'
 			'You reach the hole in the ground and peek inside using the small flashlight from your keychain. "There seems to be a floor about 5 meters down."'
-			*nl
-			'"Well, what do you think Mikhail? Shall we go down?" Igor says with a faint glimmer of adventure in his eyes.'
+			'"Well, what do you think? Shall we go down?" Igor asks with a faint glimmer of adventure in his eyes.'
 			act 'Descend':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_cave_1.jpg"></center>'
-				'Igor hands you a powerful flashlight and tells the guard to get the ladder over here. Igor is the first one to go down, once he reaches the bottom, he holds the ladder so you can safely climb down as well.'
-				*nl
-				'The cave smells musty and looks all gloomy, but you can breathe freely and the light from your flashlight illuminates the walls. You shoot a beam of light into the corridor and in the distance see something that resembles a door.'
-				*nl
-				'"Damn. If any historians hear about this, they''ll be all over this construction site." Igor mutters.'
-				*nl
+				'Igor hands you a powerful flashlight and tells the guard to bring the ladder over. Igor is the first one to go down; once he reaches the bottom, he holds the ladder so you can safely climb down as well.'
+				'The cave smells musty, but you can breathe freely and the light from your flashlight illuminates the walls. You shoot a beam of light into the corridor and see something in the distance that resembles a door.'
+				'"Damn. If any historians hear about this, they''ll be all over this construction site..." Igor mutters.'
 				'You walk up to the door and see drawings on it. Most of them resemble people, but with other stick figures as well.'
 				act 'Open the door':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_cave_3.jpg"></center>'
-					'You lean against the door, it''s stiff but you manage to push it open.'
-					*nl
-					'"Oh shit...! Take a look over there. Human bones." Igor says nervously.'
-					*nl
+					'You lean against the door. It''s stiff, but you manage to push it open.'
+					'"Oh shit! Take a look over there!" Igor exclaims nervously.'
 					'You take a look at what Igor is pointing at and see a pile of human bones with a skull on top.'
-					*nl
-					'"A tomb, I suppose." Igor mutters looking apprehensive.'
-					*nl
-					'"Probably", you nod. "We can''t rule anything out just yet."'
+					'"A tomb, I suppose..." he mutters while looking apprehensive.'
+					'"Probably," you nod. "We can''t rule anything out just yet."'
 					act 'Go further':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_cave_5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Further into the cave, you reach a room that resembles some kind of archive, filled with dozens of old, dusty scrolls inside of racks built into the walls.'
-						*nl
-						'Igor takes one of the scrolls and carefully unrolls it. "What the hell? Look at this, it must be some kind of ancient language," Igor says. "I''ll take one with me, and see what I can find out about these, maybe I can get it deciphered. So we''ll know what we are dealing with."'
-						*nl
-						'Looking around, you notice another door on the other side of the chamber, you walk over and open it.'
+						'Heading further into the cave, you reach a room that resembles some kind of archive, filled with dozens of old, dusty scrolls inside racks built into the walls.'
+						'Igor takes one of the scrolls and carefully unrolls it. "What the hell? Look at this. It must be some kind of ancient language," he says. "I''ll take one with me and see what I can find out about these. Maybe I can get it deciphered and we''ll know what we''re dealing with."'
+						'Looking around, you notice another door on the other side of the chamber. You walk over and open it.'
 						act 'Enter the room':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_cave_altar.jpg"></center>'
-							'There''s an altar in the center of the room, on it there are various pots, several gold amulets and even some stone figures. You continue looking around the room curiously, trying to figure out what it''s purpose was.'
-							*nl
+							'There''s an altar in the center of the room with various pots, several gold amulets and even some stone figures sitting on it. You continue looking around the room curiously, trying to figure out what it''s purpose was.'
 							'Looking closely at the altar, you notice a strange little amulet placed at the very top.'
 							act 'Examine the amulet':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/item_amulet.jpg"></center>'
 								'You pick up the strange amulet and examine it. <i>This is clearly very old</i>, you think to yourself.'
-								*nl
-								'While holding the amulet, you realize that it''s getting warm, almost hot. Suddenly you feel heat coursing through your entire body. You feel a surge of strength inside you. It''s like you just finished a long jog, but without the fatigue.'
-								*nl
-								'Igor enters the room with one of the scrolls in his hands. "Huh. Interesting little room.", he says, glancing over the altar. "Well, we have to make a decision: either we fill the catacombs up to the brink with cement or we let someone into these rooms. Who knows what all this stuff is, maybe it''s worth more than it looks."'
-								act 'Consult you boss':
+								'While holding the amulet, you realize that it''s getting warm, almost hot, as you suddenly feel heat coursing through your entire body. You feel a surge of strength inside you. It''s like you just finished a long jog, but without the fatigue.'
+								'Igor enters the room with one of the scrolls in his hands. "Huh. Interesting little room," he says while glancing over the altar. "Well, we have to make a decision: either we fill these catacombs up with cement or we let someone into these rooms. Who knows what all this stuff is. Maybe it''s worth more than it looks?"'
+								act 'Consult your boss':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_cave_altar.jpg"></center>'
-									'"I''ve got to think about it and consult the director before we do anything." You reply and without thinking about it, you put the small amulet into your pocket.'
-									*nl
-									'"Well, one thing''s for sure, you won''t get reception down here. Let''s go outside." Igor tells you.'
+									'"I''ve got to think about it and consult the director before we do anything," you reply and put the small amulet in your pocket without a second thought.'
+									'"Well, one thing''s for sure. You won''t get reception down here. Let''s head back outside," Igor tells you.'
 									act 'Go back to the surface':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/site_working.jpg"></center>'
-										'You walk together with Igor out of the strange chambers and up the ladder, back to the surface.'
-										*nl
-										'"We must have been down there longer than I thought, it''s already late. There will only be security on site now so there''s nothing we can do here until the morning, you should go to the hotel." Igor says.'
-										*nl
-										'With a hasty goodbye to Igor, you make your way back to your car.'
-										'<i>Damn</i>, you think, <i>tomorrow''s going to be a stressful day.</i>'
-										act 'Go to the hotel': gt 'intro_uni_tg', 'otelPRE'
+										'You walk out of the chambers and climb back up the ladder to the surface.'
+										'"We must have been down there longer than I thought," Igor says. "There''s nothing we can do here until the morning. You should go to the hotel."'
+										'With a hasty goodbye to Igor, you make your way back to your car. <i>Damn</i>, you think. <i>Tomorrow''s going to be a stressful day.</i>'
+										act 'Go to the hotel': gt 'intro_uni_tg', 'hotelPRE'
 									end
 								end
 							end
@@ -168,86 +136,64 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roadPRE':
 	end
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0] = 'otelPRE':
+if $ARGS[0] = 'hotelPRE':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/6.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your trip to the hotel is quite uneventful compared to your tomb raiding adventure.'
-	*nl
-	'You park your car and go to the receptionist to get a room. There are only double rooms available, but it''s going on the company card, so that just means you''ll get a bigger room. You swipe your company card and take your room key.'
+	'You park your car and go to the receptionist to get a room. You swipe your company card and take your room key.'
 	act 'Head upstairs to your room':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/7.jpg"></center>'
-		'Lying down on one of the beds, you start to wonder just who built that crypt and what it''s purpose was. Your thoughts drift to that amulet you found. The way that thing you touched half an hour ago is still making you feel wonderful baffles you.'
+		'Lying on one of the beds, you start wondering about who built that crypt and what it''s purpose was. Your thoughts drift to that amulet you found. The way that thing you touched half an hour ago is still making you feel wonderful, baffling you.'
 		act 'Call the director':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/7.jpg"></center>'
-			'You dial Romans'' number and after a few rings, he picks up. You report to him the details of what you found at the site with Igor: an ancient tomb, human bones, scrolls in a mysterious language and the altar in that room.'
-			*nl
+			'You dial the director''s number and after a few rings, he picks up. You fill him in on the details of what you found at the site with Igor: an ancient tomb, human bones, scrolls in a mysterious language and the altar.'
 			'The director stays silent while you give your report. A few moments later, he decides that it would be best to stop the construction. He tells you to stay and keep watch over the site until further notice.'
-			*nl
 			'You put the phone away. <i>Looks like this trip is going to last longer than expected</i>, you think to yourself.'
 			act 'Go to bed':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/7.jpg"></center>'
-				'It doesn''t take you long to drift off to sleep'
-				*nl
-				'Images begin to form in your mind and you soon find yourself in a middle of a dream. The amulet stands before you and out of it comes a ghost of some sort. Before you even realize what you are doing, you find yourself staring deep into the ghost''s eyes which then turn into two planet earths.'
-				*nl
-				'"Looking at the world most just see the mundane, but there is more to it, much more and now you see that too. You have the potential to shape it all, but first, you have company."'
-				*nl
-				'Suddenly your senses return and you are aware of the hotel room around you, you can tell you are not alone.'
+				'It doesn''t take you long to drift off to sleep. Images begin to form in your mind and you soon find yourself in a middle of a dream. The amulet stands before you and out of it comes a ghost of some sort. Before you even realize what you''re doing, you find yourself staring deep into the ghost''s eyes, which turn into two Earths.'
+				'"Looking at the world, most just see the mundane, but there''s more to it, much more. Now you see that too. You have the potential to shape it all, but first, you have company."'
+				'Your senses suddenly return and you''re aware of the hotel room around you, but you can tell you''re not alone.'
 				act 'Open your eyes':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_reinhold.jpg"></center>'
-					'As you open your eyes, you see a man standing in your room. He is wearing a long black coat and his face looks weary; he is unshaven and reminds you of most police detectives in Hollywood films.'
-					*nl
-					'"Where is the amulet?" he approaches you.'
+					'As you open your eyes, you see a man standing in your room. He''s wearing a long black coat and his unshaven face looks weary; he reminds you of a scruffy police detective from a Hollywood film.'
+					'"Where is the amulet?" he demands as he approaches you.'
 					act 'Ask who he is':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_reinhold.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Who are you?" you ask puzzledly. The man''s sudden appearance and a sense you never knew you had tell you something about him, that he is not of the world you know.'
-						*nl
-						'"Listen, don''t cause any problems now. Give me the amulet, close the construction site, and all will be fine. After all that place belongs to us," he says in a firm voice.'
+						'"Who are you?" you ask. The man''s sudden appearance and a sense you never knew you had tell you something about him; that he is not of this world.'
+						'"Give me the amulet, close the construction site, and all will be fine. After all, that place belongs to us," he says in a firm voice.'
 						*nl
 						'<i>Belongs to us?</i> His response leaves you bewildered, wondering who he is and what this is all about.'
-						*nl
-						'"Well, how about I give you a small taste of my power." the man says, and out of nowhere comes a burning desire to give him the amulet.'
+						'"How about I give you a small taste of my power?" the man asks, and out of nowhere comes a burning desire to give him the amulet.'
 						act 'Give him the amulet':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/7.jpg"></center>'
-							'You get out of the bed and give him the stone figure you had put in your pocket earlier. The man takes it, steps back, and without warning, something in his eyes begins to spin like a whirlwind, causing your own eyes to blur as if he was hypnotizing you. A few seconds later your vision clears with the man having somehow disappeared into thin air.'
-							*nl
-							'You rub your eyes, "What the hell is going on here? Was that a dream?. No, it can''t be. I wouldn''t walk around in a dream. I think." You say to no one in particular then check your pocket, the amulet is indeed gone. You sit down on the bed trying to make sense of what just happened.'
+							'You get out of the bed and give him the stone figure you put in your pocket earlier. The man takes it, steps back, and without warning, something in his eyes begins to spin like a whirlwind, causing your own eyes to blur. A few seconds later, your vision clears with the man having somehow disappeared into thin air.'
+							'You rub your eyes. "What the hell is going on here? Was that a dream?. No, it can''t be. I wouldn''t walk around in a dream. I think," you say to no one in particular then check your pocket, the amulet is indeed gone. You sit down on the bed trying to make sense of what just happened.'
 							*nl
 							'While lost in thought, you hear a knock on the door. You get up to open the door, not even thinking why you would have visitors this late at night.'
-							'"...Who''s there?", you ask, still confused.'
-							*nl
-							'A woman''s voice responds that she''s the hotel receptionist and that she needs to talk to you on an urgent matter.'
+							'"...Who''s there?" you ask, still confused.'
+							'A woman''s voice responds that she''s the hotel receptionist and that she needs to talk to you about an urgent matter.'
 							act 'Answer the door':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-								'You open the door, but don''t recall the woman in front of you being at the reception desk; the woman from earlier didn''t have red hair and glasses. After entering the room she quickly examines the place, before locking her eyes on you.'
-								*nl
-								'"Mikhail, right?" You nod.'
-								*nl
-								'"Last night you went to a certain place and took out something very valuable and powerful." the woman speaks to you.'
+								'You open the door, but don''t recall the woman in front of you being at the reception desk; the woman from earlier didn''t have red hair and glasses. After entering the room, she quickly examines the place before locking her eyes on you.'
+								'"Mikhail, right?" she asks and you nod. "You went to a certain place last night and took something very valuable and <i>very</i> powerful."'
 								act 'Another one?':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-									'<i>Again?</i>'
-									*nl
 									'You sigh, irritated that not only have you been disturbed in the middle of the night, but these idiots apparently cannot even agree among themselves which one of them should disturb you.'
-									*nl
 									'"Listen, you''re starting to bother me. That other guy already showed up asking for the damn amulet."'
-									*nl
 									'She looks at you with surprise. "What? Someone already came here? Who was it?"'
 									act 'Tell her':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-										'"It was some man in a navy cloak with ginger hair and a light beard, he didn''t tell me his name. He already took the amulet." You answer.'
-										*nl
-										'The girl''s face drops. "Damn it!" She looks into your eyes. "Okay... Mikhail, we have to go somewhere else, there are too many people that might get hurt here. Gustav, come here!" The girl calls out to the corridor.'
-										*nl
-										'A tall man enters the room'
+										'"It was some man in a navy cloak with ginger hair and a light beard. He didn''t tell me his name. He already took the amulet," you answer.'
+										'The girl''s face drops. "Damn it!" She looks into your eyes. "Okay, we have to go somewhere else. There are too many people that might get hurt here. Gustav, come in here!" she calls out to the corridor and a tall man enters the room.'
 										$pcs_firstname = 'Mikhail'
 										$pcs_lastname = 'Ivanov'
 										age = 33
@@ -283,10 +229,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'otelPRE':
 										act 'Prepare to fight':
 											*clr & cla
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_gustav.jpg"></center>'
-											'The man has a large tattoo across the left side of his face. He too has red hair'
+											'The man has a large tattoo across the left side of his face and also has red hair.'
 											$boy = 'Gustav'
 											gs 'fight','initFight',1
-
 											gs 'fight_npcdata', 'gustav'
 											fightEnding = 1
 											act 'Fight': gt 'fight', 'start'
@@ -307,91 +252,67 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'tatianaPRE':
 	$pcs_lastname = '<<$temp_lastname>>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 	'You wake up in an unfamiliar room. Standing near you is the same red-haired girl that entered your hotel room.'
-	*nl
-	'"Ah, you''re awake," she chirps. "I told this jerk he should have been more careful, but he never listens. As a result I had to use some magic to stabilize you, he almost knocked you out permanently."'
-	*nl
-	'"While you were unconscious I did some research on you. Turns out the Amulet of Power passed to you. Must have happened when you touched it. Unfortunately, Reinhold, the guy in your room, has probably realized by now that the amulet no longer has the power and now he''s out to hunt you down."'
+	'"Ah, you''re awake!" she chirps. "I told this jerk he should have been more careful, but he never listens. As a result, I had to use some magic to stabilize you."'
+	'"While you were unconscious, I did some research on you. Turns out the Amulet of Power passed to you. Must have happened when you touched it. Unfortunately, Reinhold, the guy in your room, has probably realized by now that the amulet no longer has the power and now he''s out to hunt you down."'
 	act 'What''s going on?':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-		'"What the hell is going on?" you respond. You try to move your hands, but you''re tied to the bed.'
-		*nl
-		'"Um, okay, I''ll start from the beginning," the girl says. "Magic exists and is real. Ages ago the world was not the same, the fae creatures who possess natural magic lived in balance but the succubus were free to breed with whom ever they wished."'
-		*nl
-		'"They breed with humans with that human magicians were born. The Sidhe as the most powerful of the fae feared the increasing numbers of human magicians and cast a very powerful spell to bind the succubus to them, this prevented either from being able to reproduce without the other."'
-		*nl
-		'"All magicians have some of that original fae blood in there bodies and it is through that that they are able to connect with the world of magic."'
+		'"What the hell is going on?" you ask as you try to move your hands, but you''re tied to the bed.'
+		'"Hold on, I''ll get to that. Let me start from the beginning," the girl says. "Magic exists and is real. Millenia ago, the world was not the same. The fae creatures who possess natural magic lived in balance, but the succubus were free to breed with whomever they wished."'
+		'"They bred with humans, and with that human magicians were born. The Sidhe, the most powerful of the fae, feared the increasing number of human magicians and cast a very powerful spell to bind the succubus to them, preventing either from being able to reproduce without the other."'
+		'"All magicians have some of that original fae blood in their bodies. It is through that that they are able to connect with the world of magic."'
 		*nl
-		'The redhead adjusts her glasses. "Most of the world simply ignore magic or are protected from it by magic''s natural desire to remain hidden."'
-		*nl
-		'"But last night there was a powerful burst of magical energy, strong enough to be clearly seen by any with magical connections. Can you guess where this surge came from? Yeah, that cave you found. Apparently the surge occurred when you opened the seal to the archive. Anyway, that was when we started to search, that source of power is desired by many, but it is extremely dangerous and in the wrong hands could do untold horrors."'
-		*nl
-		'She stops for a few seconds for you process that information. It seems really far fetched.'
-		*nl
-		'"As you can figure out, Reinhold wanted to prevent the amulet being misused, but he wasn''t very thorough and didn''t check you over."'
-		act 'So, the whole world is just an illusion?':
+		'She adjusts her glasses. "Most of the world simply ignores magic, or are protected from it by magic''s natural desire to remain hidden. However, there was a powerful burst of magical energy last night, strong enough to be clearly seen by any with magical connections. The surge occurred when you opened the seal to the archive. Anyway, that source of power is desired by many, but it''s extremely dangerous and could do untold horrors in the wrong hands."'
+		'She stops for a few seconds for you process the information. It seems really far fetched.'
+		'"As you can probably guess, Reinhold wanted to prevent the amulet being misused, but he wasn''t very thorough and didn''t check you over."'
+		act 'So the whole world is just an illusion?':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-			'"So magic exists and is used by all these people and creatures, but the rest of us just don''t see it, or convince ourselves it didn''t happen?"'
-			*nl
-			'The girl nods. "Yes. You''re a quick study. Machines, apartments, television and the Internet, all this really does exist and is in the form in which people see it. But if I say, hurl a fireball, then people might see that I threw a grenade or shot from a flamethrower. The human mind can''t process magic, so it blocks it as a way to protect the person from going crazy."'
-			*nl
-			'"Hence such things as little green men, UFOs, poltergeists, spontaneous combustion, are when people encounter a difficult to hide phenomenon and the conclusion is flawed. In some cases, if someone''s mind can not cope with the spell they witness, they can be driven crazy and then no one believes them."'
+			'"So magic exists and is used by all these people and creatures, but the rest of us just don''t see it, or convince ourselves it didn''t happen?" you ask.'
+			'The girl nods. "Yes. You''re a quick study. Machines, apartments, television, the Internet. All of this really does exist and is in the form in which people see it. But if I say, hurl a fireball, then people might see that I threw a grenade or shot from a flamethrower. The human mind can''t process magic, so it blocks it as a way to protect the person from going crazy."'
+			'"Hence such things as little green men, UFOs, poltergeists and spontaneous combustion are when people encounter a difficult to hide phenomenon and the conclusion is flawed. In some cases, a person''s mind can''t cope with the spell they witness and they are driven insane."'
 			act 'And who are you?':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-				'Trying to come to terms with your new reality, you ask "And who are you?"'
-				*nl
-				'The girl smiled. "Me? I''m Tatiana, a young mage with an keen interest in magical phenomenon. I specialize in the treatment of mutations, and magic relating to the body. I have little combat skill, so I rely on the services of Gustav to provide some muscle. He''s a Mutant, his mutation is due to magical exposure and it gives him unmatched physical strength and he is a great tracker."'
-				*nl
+				'"And who are you?" you ask'
+				'The girl smiles. "Me? I''m Tatiana, a young mage with a keen interest in magical phenomenon. I specialize in the treatment of mutations, and magic relating to the body. I have little combat skill, so I rely on the services of Gustav to provide some muscle. He''s a Mutant due to magical exposure. It gives him unmatched physical strength, plus he''s a great tracker."'
 				'"The two of us run a detective agency for cover and money, but our real objective is studying magic and its effects."'
 				act 'What do you want from me?':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-					'"What do you want from me?"'
-					*nl
-					'"Hmm, well... the amulet obviously," Tatiana replies. "When I looked for you, I was hoping to get that object of power to study but Reinhold got to you first. The amulet will now be pretty much useless anyway, as its power passed on to you."'
-					*nl
-					'"This isn''t good for you, though. You may think since you have the amulets'' power that you can do anything. But in reality, you''re helpless without the skill to use it. Reinhold easily overpowered your will and forced you to obey, and Gustav beat you like a puppy."'
+					'"What do you want from me?" you ask.'
+					'"The amulet. Obviously," she replies. "When I looked for you, I was hoping to get that object of power to study but Reinhold got to you first. The amulet will now be pretty much useless anyway, as its power passed on to you."'
+					'She frowns. "This isn''t good for you, though. You may think since you have the amulets'' power that you can do anything. But in reality, you''re helpless without the skill to use it. Reinhold easily overpowered your will and forced you to obey, and Gustav beat you like a puppy."'
 					act 'What is this amulet? Where did it come from?':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
 						'"And what is this amulet? Where did it come from?" you ask.'
-						'Tatiana thinks about it for a few moments. "It was made by the trickster Rikudo, one of the most powerful ancient magicians. Before he died, he taunted the only living mage who could control its immense power by cursing him to be stuck in a female form and making it only activate for a male mage."'
-						*nl
+						'She thinks about it for a few seconds. "It was made by the trickster Rikudo, one of the most powerful ancient magicians. Before he died, he taunted the only living mage who could control its immense power by cursing him to be stuck in a female form and making it only activate for a male mage."'
 						'"Great. So I''ve been thrown into this mess by the dead owner of that ancient tomb." Still trying to absorb all this information, something occurs to you. "Hang on, I''m not a mage, how could the power be transferred to me?"'
 						*nl
 						'"It seems that its long time underground has caused it to malfunction and its power has entered your body. The bad news is it is far too powerful and will kill you." At this you are filled with fear and start to struggle against your bindings.'
-						*nl
 						'"You are lucky Reinhold didn''t realize this, he would have stopped you from accidentally wielding the power and killing yourself and who knows how many others by killing you in that hotel room. I have another way to save you, but you''re not going to like it."'
-						*nl
 						'You don''t say anything, so she continues, "I can feel the aura of power emanating from you, by drawing from that I can perform a powerful magic spell that will transform you into someone who is protected from the masculine alignment of the power."'
 						act 'Uh, I do not understand, what are you suggesting?':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-							'"Uh, I do not understand, what are you suggesting?" you ask her.'
-							*nl
+							'"I don''t understand. What are you suggesting?" you ask.'
 							'Tatiana runs a hand through her hair and giggles. "I''ll turn you into a young girl and the power will lie dormant, saving you from blowing up a city or something."'
-							*nl
-							'Your eyes widen in shock.'
-							*nl
-							'"Well, there is another way, I can just stop your heart and let your power dissolve into nature, but you will die. I''m not Reinhold, I can take this risk and I don''t want to kill you. Maybe with more time and research I can work out another solution, but I cannot leave you like this."'
-							act 'What about your family?':
+							'Your eyes widen in shock and she adjusts her glasses again. "I could also just stop your heart and let your power dissolve into nature, but you''ll die. Maybe with more time and research, I can work out another solution, but I can''t leave you like this."'
+							act 'What about my family?':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-								'"Hey, I don''t want to be a woman. I have a family; a wife and a daughter," you tell her, afraid.'
-								*nl
-								'Tatiana smiles. "Well the choice is simple, either you die or live without a penis for the time being."'
-								*nl
-								'"As for your family, not to worry. I''ll arrange everything. We will fabricate your death to get Reinhold off your back. To make your transition easier I''ll cover your memory of the family, they will only be ghostly memories, you won''t even remember where you lived. Don''t worry, I won''t erase your entire memory and leave you a useless vegetable."'
+								'"Hey, I don''t want to be a woman! I have a family; a wife and a daughter," you tell her, afraid.'
+								'Tatiana smiles. "Well, the choice is simple. Either you die or live without a penis for the time being."'
+								'"As for your family, not to worry. I''ll arrange everything. We''ll fabricate your death to get Reinhold off your back. To make your transition easier, I''ll block your memory of your family. You won''t even remember where you lived. Don''t worry, I won''t erase your entire memory and leave you a useless vegetable."'
 								act 'There must be another way!':
 									$loc = 'intro_uni_tg'
 									$loc_arg = 'custom'
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-									'Panicking, you yell out "There must be another way!" You tug at the restraints on the bed.'
-									*nl
-									'Tatiana''s face turns serious. "Do not argue. It''s the only way available to me. You''ll need to use a new name, so think it over in your dreams and tell me when you wake up, otherwise I''ll give you a pretty name. Now go to sleep." She puts her hand on your chest and your vision immediately fades. You dream about a girl you never knew and what she did at school...'
+									'"There must be another way!" you yell while tugging at the restraints on the bed.'
+									'Tatiana''s face turns serious. "Do not argue. It''s the only way available to me. You''ll need to use a new name, so think it over in your dreams and tell me when you wake up, otherwise I''ll give you a pretty name. Now go to sleep."' 
+									'She puts her hand on your chest and your vision immediately fades. You dream about a girl you never knew and what she did at school...'
 									act 'Dream': gt 'intro_city_select', 'start'
 								end
 							end
@@ -426,42 +347,41 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sleepPRE':
 	killobj
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_tatiana.jpg"></center>'
-	'"You''re awake?." Tatiana says looking into your eyes.'
+	'"You''re awake!" Tatiana says while looking into your eyes.'
 	act 'Look at yourself':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/8.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Fuck," you say and immediately shut your mouth again. Your voice... it''s so feminine. Tatiana giggles.'
-		'"This is the first time I changed the gender of a person, therefore I just HAD to see your reaction. Totally worth it. But you turned out exactly like her."'
-		'Puzzled, you ask "Like who?"'
-		'"<<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>> of course. It''s the dead girl I swapped you with. I found her in the morgue, erased evidence of her death,  made her look like you, and you like her. You needed an alibi, and I needed to throw Reinhold off your trail. Today, Mikhail crashed his car into the pit and died, it''s on the news." With these words, Tatiana picked up the remote and turned on the TV.'
+		'"Fuck," you say and immediately shut your mouth again. Your voice... It''s so feminine! Tatiana giggles.'
+		'"This is the first time I''ve changed the gender of a person, therefore I just <i>had</i> to see your reaction. Totally worth it. But you turned out exactly like her."'
+		'"Like who?" you ask.'
+		'"<<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, of course. I found her in the morgue, erased evidence of her death, made her look like you, and you like her. You needed an alibi, and I needed to throw Reinhold off your trail. Today, Mikhail crashed his car into the pit and died, it''s on the news." She picks up the remote and turns the TV on.'
 		
 		act 'Watch TV':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/1_tf/9.jpg"></center>'
 			'There is a news report about a businessman who drove his car into a hole at a construction site. He died in hospital without regaining consciousness.'
-			'You look at Tatiana, bewildered. She has an enigmatic smile on her face. "Well, I''m still a magician and that''s something that I can do. Reinhold has definitely lost the trail. The body in that car was a perfect copy of your old self, from your absorbed amulet energy down to the placement of every single hair."'
-			*nl
-			'"Anyways, here are your new legal documents, including a new passport, and student ID. Starting today, you are <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, an 18 year old girl who is attending the Saint Petersburg University, after graduating from the Secondary school in Pavlovsk.. She grew up in Pavlovsk, with her mother, step father, sister and half brother. Tomorrow her family is helping her move to the dorms. Luckily for us she kept a journal about her life, notes about her family and friends, as well as many other things. I suggest you study it and memorize it, but to help you out she was admitted to the hospital with a minor head injury. I made sure her family was informed she has some memory issues so it should help with you fitting in and acting different than she did. But learn to act like her as quickly as you can, so you don''t bring unwanted attention to yourself.'
-			*nl
-			'This is a lot for you to take in and it takes a moment for you to grasp it all. "Wait what about the real <<$pcs_firstname>>?"'
-			'She gives you a sad smile. "She was killed recently, that is why I picked her. No one knows she died so I was able to fix it so no one will know and give you a new life to hide in. I know it is not ideal and whenever we can fix this and change you back we can let her rest, think of it this way you are giving her family extra time with her."'
+			'You look at Tatiana, bewildered. She has an enigmatic smile on her face. "I''m a magician and that''s something I can do. Reinhold has definitely lost the trail. The body in that car was a perfect copy of your old self, from your absorbed amulet energy down to the placement of every single hair."'
+			'"Anyway, here are your new legal documents, including a new passport and student ID. Starting today, you are <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, an 18 year old girl who is attending the Saint Petersburg University. She grew up in Pavlovsk with her mother, stepfather, sister and half brother, who are helping her move to the dorms tomorrow."' 
+			'She hands you a notebook. "Luckily for us, she kept a journal about her life, notes about her family and friends, as well as many other things. I suggest you study and memorize it, but to help you out, I''ve fabricated a story that she was admitted to the hospital with a head injury and has some memory issues. This should help with you fitting in and acting different than she did, but learn to act like her as quickly as you can so you don''t bring unwanted attention to yourself."'
 			*nl
-			'You sigh and shake your head, this is all so much to take in, you don''t even know what to say. Then she adds "At least she had an apartment to call home. Here are the keys, she didn''t have much in her apartment yet, but study her journal, learn it like your life depends on it, because in a way it does. Now get up, you''ve got to go to your new home and start a new life."'
-			'Gustav, the redhead with a tattoo on his face, enters the room. He looks at you. "Come on, I''ll take you."'
+			'This is a lot for you to take in and it takes a moment for you to grasp it all. "Wait, what about the real <<$pcs_firstname>>?"'
+			'She gives you a sad smile. "She was killed. No one knows she died, and nobody will know, giving you a new life to hide in. I know it''s not ideal and whenever we can fix this and change you back, we can let her rest. Just think of it this way; you''re giving her family extra time with her."'
+			'You sigh and shake your head. You don''t even know what to say. "Here are the keys to her apartment. Study her journal and memorize it like your life depends on it, because in a way it does. Now get up, you''ve got to go to your new home and start a new life."'
+			'Gustav enters the room and looks at you. "Come on, I''ll take you."'
 			act 'Go with Gustav':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/1_openings/shared/npc_gustav.jpg"></center>'
-				'Gustav silently takes you to the garage and you enter his black jeep. Gustav gets behind the wheel and drives you into the city. You silently speculate about what to do now.'
+				'Gustav silently takes you to the garage and you enter his black jeep. Gustav gets behind the wheel and drives you into the city as you silently speculate about what to do now.'
 				'After a few minutes, while keeping his eyes on the road, Gustav speaks. "I''m sorry I beat you up. I have trouble controlling myself during a fight. You had a large build and for a second I thought you might be dangerous, so I ended up hitting you with my full force."'
 				*nl
-				'You look at him. "Forget it. Listen Gustav... What do I do now?"'
-				'Gustav nods. "Well, I would advise you to buy what you will need and see about getting a part time job to help out with the expenses. Her family was fairly poor so I am not sure how much they will be able to help you. Also your mind is very weak. If you don''t take care of yourself you will go crazy. You need to eat well, sleep regularly and have fun. Don''t become depressed or else you''ll end up in a madhouse. Don''t go looking for Tatiana; you won''t find her. Secondly, if we need to contact you, we will find you."'
+				'You look at him. "Forget about it. What do I do now?"'
+				'Gustav nods. "Well, I would advise you to buy what you''ll need and see about getting a part time job to help out with the expenses. Her family is fairly poor, so I''m not sure how much they''ll be able to help you. Also your mind is very weak. If you don''t take care of yourself, you''ll go crazy. You need to eat well, sleep regularly and have fun. Don''t become depressed or else you''ll end up in a madhouse. Don''t go looking for Tatiana; you won''t find her. Lastly, if we need to contact you, we will find you."'
 				*nl
-				'You arrive at some old Soviet era buildings in Pavlovsk. Gustav stops the car and points a finger at the entrance. "You''re in apartment 7 on the second floor. Tatiana already gave you the key, so go. Don''t just give up. Not everyone gets an entirely new chance at life. Tatiana and I will keep an eye out for you."'
-				'"Also study that journal, try to fit in and make the best of your new life." You just nod, not knowing what to say you open the car door to get out.'
+				'You arrive at some old Soviet era buildings in Pavlovsk. Gustav stops the car and points a finger at the entrance. "You''re in apartment 7 on the second floor. Tatiana already gave you the key, so go. Don''t give up. Not everyone gets an entirely new chance at life."'
+				'"Also study that journal and try to fit in and make the best of your new life." You just nod, not knowing what to say as you open the car door and get out.'
 				act 'Go to the apartment':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/uni_day.jpg"></center>'
-					'You are exhausted and trying to take in all the strange things you''ve learnt and barely speak to anyone at home. You remember your Mom sitting you down and making you eat something before you get an early night''s sleep.'
+					'You''re exhausted and are still struggling to take in all the strange things you''ve learnt, so decide to get an early night''s sleep.'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'intro_uni', 'intro'
 				end
 			end

locations/pornhist.qsrc

@@ -259,14 +259,14 @@ $pornfilmdesc = {
 		pcash = 50
 		pfactress = 1
 		actbonus = rand(1,2)
-		$tags = 'lesbian, tribbing, double dildo, vaginal'
+		$tags = 'tribbing, double dildo, vaginal'
 		$pfilmtext = 'You had sex with a girl using a double dildo.'
 	elseif film_type = 18:
 		pfType = 0
 		pcash = 50
 		pfactress = 1
 		actbonus = rand(1,2)
-		$tags = 'lesbian, strapon, vaginal, anal'
+		$tags = 'strapon, vaginal, anal'
 		$pfilmtext = 'You had sex with a girl using a strapon.'
 	elseif film_type = 19:
 		pfType = 0
@@ -274,7 +274,7 @@ $pornfilmdesc = {
 		pfactor = 1
 		pfactress = 1
 		actbonus = rand(2,3)
-		$tags = 'threesome, mff, blowjob, anal, cumshare'
+		$tags = 'mff, blowjob, anal, cumshare'
 		$pfilmtext = 'You took part in an MFF threesome, sucking a guy off before he fucked your ass while the girl licked your pussy. You got an anal creampie and shared it with the girl.'
 	elseif film_type = 20:
 		pfType = 0
@@ -282,7 +282,7 @@ $pornfilmdesc = {
 		pfactor = 1
 		pfactress = 1
 		actbonus = rand(2,3)
-		$tags = 'threesome, mff, blowjob, anal, creampie, cumshare, cuni'
+		$tags = 'mff, blowjob, anal, creampie, cumshare, cuni'
 		$pfilmtext = 'You took part in an MFF threesome, sucking him off before he fucked her ass while you licked her pussy. She shared her anal creampie with you.'
 	end
 	dynamic $porntag