[text edit] clean up Vnlake1

locations/Vnlake1.qsrc

@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 # Vnlake1
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake1.jpg"></center>'
-'While you were sunbathing a tipsy girl holding a bottle of wine walks up to you, she sits down next to you and begins to stroke your back.'
+'While you are sunbathing, a tipsy girl holding a bottle of wine walks up to you. She sits down next to you and begins to stroke your back.'
 	
 gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist'
 if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:	
@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ act 'Kiss':
 	*clr
 	girl += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You turn to her and kiss her lips, she begins to fondle your breasts with her tongue, and her hand massages your pussy.'
+	'You turn to her and kiss her lips. She begins to fondle your breasts with her tongue, and her hand massages your pussy.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'give_kiss', 5, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian'
@@ -31,7 +31,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'variant':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake0.jpg"></center>'
-	'The girl looks at you in anticipation of your actions'
+	'The girl looks at you in anticipation of your actions.'
 
 	act 'Lick her':gt 'Vnlake1', 'ukuni'
 	act 'Ask her to lick you':gt 'Vnlake1', 'kuni'
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ukuni':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake4.jpg"></center>'
-	'You kiss her breasts, eventually moving down lower and lower until your mouth reaches her pussy. You begin to caress her with your tongue, opening the route for your tongue to touch her clitoris, she pushes her lips apart with her fingers to give you full access and you lap away at her clitoris.'
+	'You kiss her breasts, eventually moving down lower and lower until your mouth reaches her pussy. You begin to caress her with your tongue, opening the route for your tongue to touch her clitoris. She pushes her lips apart with her fingers to give you full access, and you lap away.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kuni':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake5.jpg"></center>'
-	'The Girl runs her tongue over your thighs, crotch and delicately kisses your vagina, her tongue slides over your slit then caressing your clitoris it penetrates your vagina.'
+	'The girl runs her tongue over your thighs and crotch and delicately kisses your vagina. Her tongue slides over your slit then, caressing your clitoris, it penetrates your vagina.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anuli':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake6.jpg"></center>'
-	'She kisses your buttocks affectionately, eventually moving to the center. Reaching her goal, she spends your anus with her tongue, then shoves it inside, pulls back to again lick the anus, then repeats several times.'
+	'She kisses your buttocks affectionately, eventually moving to the center. Reaching her goal, she spreads your anus with her tongue, then shoves it inside, pulls back to again lick the anus, then repeats several times.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -87,7 +87,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bvag':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake7.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take the bottle neck and poke it into her pussy, she kisses you while you are driving with one hand and with the other, fondle her breasts.'
+	'You take the bottle neck and poke it into her pussy. She kisses you while you drive it in and out with one hand and, with the other, fondle her breasts.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -114,7 +114,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ubvag':
 	*clr
 	orgasm += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake9.jpg"></center>'
-	'The girl puts the bottle on your pussy, she moves it back and forth while constantly turning it. It feels really good and just keeps getting better, you start to fantasize having sex with a stranger, when your body shudders in orgasm.'
+	'The girl puts the bottle in your pussy. She moves it back and forth while constantly turning it. It feels really good and just keeps getting better. You start to fantasize about having sex with a stranger as your body shudders in orgasm.'
 
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'lesbian'
@@ -127,7 +127,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ubanal':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake10.jpg"></center>'
-	'The girl spits on your ass, collects saliva on the bottle neck and inserts it into your anus, you feel the glass slide into your ass, bringing you pleasure.'
+	'The girl spits on your ass, collects saliva on the bottle neck and inserts it into your anus. You feel the glass slide into your ass, bringing you pleasure.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -140,7 +140,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ubsit':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake11.jpg"></center>'
-	'You put the bottle down and sit on it with your anus, you like the slippery feel of it, she caresses your breasts with her tongue until you get back off the bottle.'
+	'You put the bottle down and sit on it with your anus. You like the slippery feel of it. The girl caresses your breasts with her tongue until you get back off the bottle.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -153,7 +153,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake12.jpg"></center>'
-	'You sit across from each other, your legs interwoven so your pussies touch and started to moving your hips caress each other. You carry on doing this while kissing and touching each other until the wave of pleasure covers you both.'
+	'You sit across from each other, your legs interwoven so your pussies touch, and start to move your hips while caressing each other. You carry on doing this while kissing and touching each other until the wave of pleasure covers you both.'
 
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 	gs 'arousal', 'trib', 10, 'lesbian'