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[text edits] Standard Lydia proofing

itslydiabxtch 1 year ago
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locations/katja_chat.qsrc

@@ -94,7 +94,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	if npc_sex['A14'] > 0:
 		if katjaQW['slut'] >= 100:
-			'Katja embraces you and gives you quick kiss on the lips. "How are you, <<$pcs_nickname>>? It''s great to see you," she says after letting you go.'
+			'Katja embraces you and gives you a quick kiss on the lips. "How are you, <<$pcs_nickname>>? It''s great to see you," she says after letting you go.'
 			'"I''m good," you answer. "How about you?"'
 			'"I''m doing fine. In fact, even better now that you''re here," she replies.'
 		elseif katjaQW['slut'] >= 50:
@@ -110,9 +110,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		act 'Say you can''t stay to chat': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	else
 		if fame['city_slut'] > 200:
-			'"This is not the place to attract boys," Katja says in a mocking tone. "Take your antics somewhere else!"'
+			'"This is not the place to attract boys," Katja says mockingly. "Take your antics somewhere else!"'
 			'"Maybe I am not hunting for boys but redheaded girls this time," you reply in jest.'
-			'"Stop it! I''m not interested," she says in a tone less harsh than you expected.'
+			'"Stop it! I''m not interested," she says, in a tone less harsh than you expected.'
 			'"Maybe you should be," you say with a smirk. "I could definitely teach you a thing or two about how to have fun."'
 			'Katja''s face grows red and her breath hitches, defying the stern look on her face.'
 			if npc_rel['A14'] > 40:
@@ -122,18 +122,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				act 'Leave': gt $loc, $loc_arg			
 			end
 		elseif npc_rel['A14'] > 60:
-			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>, great to see you. How is it going?" Katja asks.'
+			'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Great to see you. How is it going?" Katja asks.'
 			'"It''s going good," you reply. "How about you?"'
 			'"I''m good," Katja says.'
 			act 'Continue chatting with Katja': gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
 			act 'Say you don''t have time to chat': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		elseif npc_rel['A14'] < 25:
-			'"What are you doing here?" Katja says. "I don''t have time for bullies like you." She then turns around and ignores you.'
+			'"What are you doing here?" Katja asks. "I don''t have time for bullies like you." She then turns around and ignores you.'
 			act 'Leave': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		else
-			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>," Katja says, looking awkwardly at you, like she is trying to determine why you approached her.'
-			'"Hi Katja," you say. "How are you?"'
-			'"I''m good," she says and her composure loosens up a little.'
+			'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>," Katja says, looking awkwardly at you like she is trying to determine why you approached her.'
+			'"Hi, Katja," you say. "How are you?"'
+			'"I''m good," she says, and her composure loosens a little.'
 			act 'Continue chatting with Katja': gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
 			act 'Say you don''t have time to chat': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
@@ -148,7 +148,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'uni_cafe':
 
 	if npc_sex['A14'] > 0:
 		if katjaQW['slut'] >= 100:
-			'Katja get up and gives you quick kiss on the lips. "How are you, <<$pcs_nickname>>? It''s great to see you," she says after sitting down again.'
+			'Katja gets up and gives you a quick kiss on the lips. "How are you, <<$pcs_nickname>>? It''s great to see you," she says after sitting down again.'
 			'"I''m good," you answer. "How about you?"'
 			'"I''m doing fine. In fact, even better now that you''re here," she replies.'
 		else
@@ -157,7 +157,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'uni_cafe':
 			'"I''m doing fine. In fact, even better now that you''re here," she replies.'
 		end
 		if uni_lunch_bought = 1:
-			'You sit down and start eating your lunch with Katja while the two of you are talking'
+			'You sit down and start eating your lunch with Katja while you are talking.'
 			act 'Chat with Katja while you are eating': uni_lunch_bought = 0 & gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
 		else
 			act 'Continue chatting with Katja': gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
@@ -165,14 +165,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'uni_cafe':
 		end
 	else
 		if fame['city_slut'] > 200:
-			'"This is not the place to attract boys," Katja says in a mocking tone. "Take your antics somewhere else!"'
+			'"This is not the place to attract boys," Katja says mockingly. "Take your antics somewhere else!"'
 			'"Maybe I am not hunting for boys but redheaded girls this time," you reply in jest.'
-			'"Stop it! I''m not interested," she says in a tone less harsh than you expected.'
+			'"Stop it! I''m not interested," she says, in a tone less harsh than you expected.'
 			'"Maybe you should be," you say with a smirk. "I could definitely teach you a thing or two about how to have fun."'
 			'Katja''s face grows red and her breath hitches, defying the stern look on her face.'
 			if npc_rel['A14'] > 40:
 				if uni_lunch_bought = 1:
-					'You sit down and start eating your lunch with Katja while the two of you are talking'
+					'You sit down and start eating your lunch with Katja while you are talking.'
 					act 'Chat with Katja while you are eating': uni_lunch_bought = 0 & gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
 				else
 					act 'Continue chatting with Katja': gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
@@ -182,25 +182,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'uni_cafe':
 				act 'Leave': gt 'uni_cafe'		
 			end
 		elseif npc_rel['A14'] > 60:
-			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>, great to see you. How is it going?" Katja asks.'
+			'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>.Great to see you. How is it going?" Katja asks.'
 			'"It''s going good," you reply. "How about you?"'
 			'"I''m good," Katja says.'
 			if uni_lunch_bought = 1:
-				'You sit down and start eating your lunch with Katja while the two of you are talking'
+				'You sit down and start eating your lunch with Katja while you are talking.'
 				act 'Chat with Katja while you are eating': uni_lunch_bought = 0 & gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
 			else
 				act 'Continue chatting with Katja': gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
 				act 'Say you can''t stay to chat': gt 'uni_cafe'
 			end
 		elseif npc_rel['A14'] < 25:
-			'"What are you doing here?" Katja says. "I don''t have time for bullies like you." She then turns around and ignores you.'
+			'"What are you doing here?" Katja asks. "I don''t have time for bullies like you." She then turns around and ignores you.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'uni_cafe'
 		else
 			'"Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>," Katja says, looking awkwardly at you, like she is trying to determine why you approached her.'
 			'"Hi Katja," you say. "How are you?"'
-			'"I''m good," she says and her composure loosens up a little.'
+			'"I''m good," she says, and her composure loosens a little.'
 			if uni_lunch_bought = 1:
-				'You sit down and start eating your lunch with Katja while the two of you are talking'
+				'You sit down and start eating your lunch with Katja while you are talking.'
 				act 'Chat with Katja while you are eating': uni_lunch_bought = 0 & gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
 			else
 				act 'Continue chatting with Katja': gt 'katja_chat', 'chat'
@@ -216,24 +216,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'chat':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big14.jpg"></center>'
 	if locat['katja'] = 26:
 		if $university['enrolled_in'] = 'teaching_studies':
-			'Katja says you need to leave for class now so that you aren''t late.'
+			'Katja says you need to leave for class now, so you aren''t late.'
 			hour -= 1
 			if university['semester_week'] > 0 and university['enrolled_in_semester'] > university['semester_passed']: gs 'uni_lessons', 'schedule'
 			act 'Say you aren''t going to class and leave': hour += 1 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		else
-			'Katja says that she needs to leave now so that she isn''t late for class.'
+			'Katja says she needs to leave now, so she isn''t late for class.'
 			hour -= 1
 			if university['semester_week'] > 0 and university['enrolled_in_semester'] > university['semester_passed']: gs 'uni_lessons', 'schedule'
 			act 'Say goodbye': hour +=1 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
 	elseif locat['katja'] = 50:
 		if $university['enrolled_in'] = 'teaching_studies':
-			'Katja says that you need to leave for class now so that you aren''t late for the exam.'
+			'Katja says that you need to leave for class now, so you aren''t late for the exam.'
 			hour -= 1
 			if university['exam_week'] > 0 and university['enrolled_in_semester'] > university['semester_passed']: gs 'uni_lessons', 'exam_schedule'
 			act 'Say you aren''t going to the exam and leave': hour += 1 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		else
-			'Katja says that she needs to leave for class now so that she isn''t late for her exam.'
+			'Katja says she needs to leave for class now, so she isn''t late for her exam.'
 			hour -= 1
 			if university['exam_week'] > 0 and university['enrolled_in_semester'] > university['semester_passed']: gs 'uni_lessons', 'exam_schedule'
 			act 'Say goodbye': hour +=1 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -285,12 +285,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'chat1':
 	!!end
 
 	if locat['katja'] = 24: 
-		'Katja grabs a magazine lying on the table, opens it and hands it to you. "Look at that dress, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I think it would look very good on you," she says. It is indeed a nice dress, but before you can respond, she is already flipping pages to another dress.'
+		'Katja grabs a magazine lying on the table, opens it and hands it to you. "Look at that dress, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I think it would look perfect on you," she says. It is a lovely dress, but before you can respond, she is already flipping pages to another dress.'
 		'Katja spends the next few minutes showing you clothes that she thinks would suit you or would just like for herself.'
 		if university['semester_week'] > 0 and university['enrolled_in_semester'] > university['semester_passed']: gs 'uni_lessons', 'schedule'
 		if university['exam_week'] > 0 and university['enrolled_in_semester'] > university['semester_passed']: gs 'uni_lessons', 'exam_schedule'
 	elseif locat['katja'] = 25:
-		'Katja suddenly gestures to a tall brunette in a long dress walking by. "Look at her! She is so pretty in that dress. I wish I had that," she says longingly. You''re unsure if she meant that she wants the dress or the girl.'
+		'Katja suddenly gestures to a tall brunette in a long dress walking by. "Look at her! She is so pretty in that dress. I wish I had that," she says longingly. You''re unsure if she meant she wanted the dress or the girl.'
 		'You spend the next several minutes talking with Katja about the clothes and makeup of the girls who pass you by.'
 		if university['semester_week'] > 0 and university['enrolled_in_semester'] > university['semester_passed']: gs 'uni_lessons', 'schedule'
 		if university['exam_week'] > 0 and university['enrolled_in_semester'] > university['semester_passed']: gs 'uni_lessons', 'exam_schedule'
@@ -316,7 +316,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'first_meet':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big14.jpg"></center>'
 	'"Are you studying at uni?" you ask.'
 	'"Yes, I''m '+iif(year = 2017 and month < 10, 'going to study', 'studying')+' to become a teacher," Katja says. "What about you. Are you also studying here?"'
-	'"I''m '+iif( $university['enrolled_in'] = 'teaching_studies', ' also going to study to become a teacher.', ' '+iif(university[student] = 1, 'in the '+func('uni_programs', 'program_name')+' program', 'not studying at the university')+',')+'" you tell Katja.'
+	'"I''m '+iif( $university['enrolled_in'] = 'teaching_studies', ' also going to study to become a teacher,', ' '+iif(university[student] = 1, 'in the '+func('uni_programs', 'program_name')+' program', 'not studying at the university,')+',')+'" you tell Katja.'
 	act 'Talk about something else': gt 'katja_chat', 'chat1'
 end	
 
@@ -324,15 +324,15 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sofia1':
 	sofiaQW['QWstage'] = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big14.jpg"></center>'
-	'"So what do you think about my roommate?" Katja asks with a curious look on her face.'
+	'"So, what do you think about my roommate?" Katja asks with a curious look on her face.'
 	'"She seems nice," you answer. "But she sure does talk a lot."'
 	'"She talks constantly; she never shuts up! Like she has nobody else to talk to except me," Katja complains.'
 	'"Is that true?" you ask.'
-	'"Maybe. I don''t think she''s made any friends since she moved here. So she probably only has me and her boyfriend," Katja says. "If she just had something interesting to say it might be a bit more bearable," Katja continues.'
+	'"Maybe. I don''t think she''s made any friends since she moved here. So she probably only has her boyfriend and me," Katja says. "If she just had something interesting to say, it might be a bit more bearable," Katja continues.'
 	'"She never says anything interesting?" you ask.'
-	'"Well, sometimes she talks about her classes, which isn''t too boring or she''ll tell me about something she saw or experienced that day," Katja says. "But mostly she just tells the same stories from her stupid hometown in the fucking middle of nowhere, or even worse, just fawns over her boyfriend." The redhead looks at you and smiles slightly, "At least she knows you now, so maybe she''ll start bothering you instead so I can get a little bit of peace."'
-	'"Hopefully she can make some more friends soon," you say with a laugh.'
-	'"I doubt it," Katja says. "She is constantly hanging out with her boyfriend and I don''t think he wants her to meet other girls. She also goes back to her hometown on Thursday nights and stays until Sunday, so she doesn''t have much time to meet anyone."'
+	'"Well, sometimes she talks about her classes, which isn''t too boring, or she''ll tell me about something she saw or experienced that day," Katja says. "But mostly, she just tells the same stories from her stupid hometown in the fucking middle of nowhere, or even worse, just fawns over her boyfriend." The redhead looks at you and smiles slightly, "At least she knows you now, so maybe she''ll start bothering you instead so I can get a little bit of peace."'
+	'"Hopefully, she can make some more friends soon," you laughingly.'
+	'"I doubt it," Katja says. "She is constantly hanging out with her boyfriend, and I don''t think he wants her to meet other girls. She also returns to her hometown on Thursday nights and stays until Sunday, so she doesn''t have much time to meet anyone."'
 	'"You''re not too fond of her boyfriend?" you ask.'
 	'"I don''t know," she says. "There''s something about him that feels a little bit off, but I shouldn''t speak ill of people you don''t even know. So let''s wait until after you meet him."'
 	act 'Talk about something else': gt 'katja_chat', 'chat1'