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You can now go to pool cafe while still wearing swimwear

Vengeance_11 6 дней назад
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  1. 20 11
      locations/pav_pool.qsrc
  2. 45 47
      locations/pav_pool_events.qsrc

+ 20 - 11
locations/pav_pool.qsrc

@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'building' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/entrance.jpg"></center>'
 		'Pavlovsk''s public swimming pool is rather dated, but still serves it''s purpose quite well.'
-		'The entrance fee is 100 <b>₽</b> for the full day, but students get a discount and it only costs you 60 <b>₽</b>.'
+		'The entrance fee is 100 <b>₽</b> for the full day, but students get a discount and it only costs them 60 <b>₽</b>.'
 		if SchoolAtestat = 0:
 			pav_swimpool['entrancefee'] = 60
 		else
@@ -54,11 +54,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'entrance':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/entrance.jpg"></center>'
 	'You''re currently inside the entrance to the swimming pool.'
-	'From here you can access the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''lockerfemale''">girls locker room</a>, visit the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''cafeteria''">cafeteria</a> or browse the pool''s <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''store''">store</a>.'
+	'From here, you can access the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''lockerfemale''">girls locker room</a>, visit the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''cafeteria''">cafeteria</a> or browse the pool''s <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''store''">store</a>.'
 	*nl
-	'There is a sign by the store''s entrance that reads: "If closed, I''m working in the pool. Be back soon." It seems like the store clerk is also the janitor.'
-
-	act 'Leave': gt 'pav_pool', 'building'
+	'There''s a sign by the store''s entrance that reads: "If closed, I''m working in the pool. Be back soon." It seems like the store clerk is also the janitor.'
+	act 'Leave':
+		if PCloswimwear = 1:
+			cla
+			'You need to change out of your swimwear if you want to leave!'
+			act 'Return': gt 'pav_pool', 'entrance'
+		else
+			minut += 2
+			gs 'stat'
+			gt 'pav_pool', 'building'
+		end
+	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'store':
@@ -149,8 +158,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lockerfemale':
 	minut += 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/lockers.jpg"></center>'
-	'The changing rooms are old and murky. They are uncomfortable, cramped and you always feel compelled to leave as quickly as possible. The small windows on one side don''t make you feel any better.'
-	'From here you can access the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''showerfemale''">showers</a> or go to the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''mirror''">mirrors</a> area, highly contested in busy times. You can also access the pool, but only if you''re wearing swimwear.'
+	'The changing rooms are old, murky and uncomfortable. They''re also very cramped and you always feel compelled to leave as quickly as possible. The small windows on one side don''t make you feel any better.'
+	'From here, you can access the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''showerfemale''">showers</a> or go to the <a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''pav_pool'', ''mirror''">mirrors</a> area, highly contested in busy times. You can also access the pool, but only if you''re wearing swimwear.'
 
 	if func('changingroom','count_swim_item') > 0 or $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 		act 'Change your clothes':
@@ -191,7 +200,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lockerfemale':
 	if $clothingworntype <> 'nude': act 'Strip all clothing': gs 'clothing', 'strip_all' & gt 'pav_pool', 'lockerfemale'
 
 	act 'Leave':
-		if PCloswimwear = 1 or $clothingworntype = 'nude':
+		if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 			cla
 			'You need to get dressed first!'
 			act 'Return': gt 'pav_pool', 'lockerfemale'
@@ -304,13 +313,13 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'cafeteria':
 	minut += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/cafeteria<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
 	'The cafeteria doesn''t have a lot on the menu and only offers some basic snacks.'
-	'Two girls are currently ordering from the cashier.'
+	'Two girls in bikinis are currently ordering from the cashier.'
 
 	act 'Order':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/cafeteriaturn.jpg"></center>'
-		'It''s finally your turn and you sit on one of the stools while you order.'
+		'It''s finally your turn and you take a seat on one of the stools.'
 
 		if money < 100:
 			'You don''t have enough money to buy a snack.'
@@ -396,7 +405,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pool':
 	end
 
 	'The pool is rather old, but still has a certain charm to it. The wall to wall windows allow for a nice atmosphere during the day and there is an upper balcony where people often watch from above.'
-	'From here you can access the female locker room.'
+	'From here, you can access the female locker room.'
 	if hour >= 8 and hour < 21:
 		act 'Climb into the pool':
 			*clr & cla

+ 45 - 47
locations/pav_pool_events.qsrc

@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'store_simsuit_buy':
 				'Your purse is empty. "Well, I don''t have anything..."'
 			end
 			*nl
-			'"I have a....suggestion. If you let me see you naked, then I''ll give it to you, free of charge..." he says with a perverted smile.'
+			'"I have a.... suggestion. If you let me see you naked, then I''ll give it to you, free of charge..." he says with a perverted smile.'
 			'You look at him perplexed, but he just keeps smiling at you.'
 			gs 'willpower', 'humiliation', 'self'
 			if will_cost > pcs_willpwr:
@@ -193,10 +193,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'locker_clothed_to_nude':
 	minut += 3
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(0, 9) = 0:
+	if rand(0,9) = 0:
 		if pav_swimpool['storeclerkvisit'] >= 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/photoclothing.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you take your clothes off, you are startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
+			'As you take your clothes off, you''re startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
 			'You''re certain that it sounded like that creepy store clerk''s camera, but you can''t see anything and just tell yourself that you''re being paranoid and continue stripping.'
 			pav_swimpool['storeclerkhiddenphotos'] += 1
 		else
@@ -217,10 +217,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'locker_swim_to_nude':
 	!!stage = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(0, 9) = 0:
+	if rand(0,9) = 0:
 		if pav_swimpool['storeclerkvisit'] >= 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/photoclothing.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you take your swimwear off, you are startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
+			'As you take your swimwear off, you''re startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
 			'You''re certain that it sounded like that creepy store clerk''s camera, but you can''t see anything and just tell yourself that you''re being paranoid and continue stripping.'
 			pav_swimpool['storeclerkhiddenphotos'] += 1
 		else
@@ -240,10 +240,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'locker_nude_to_clothed':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(0, 9) = 0:
+	if rand(0,9) = 0:
 		if pav_swimpool['storeclerkvisit'] >= 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/photoclothing.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you change back into your clothes, you are startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
+			'As you change back into your clothes, you''re startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
 			'You''re certain that it sounded like that creepy store clerk''s camera, but as you don''t see anything, you tell yourself you''re just being paranoid and continue getting dressed.'
 			pav_swimpool['storeclerkhiddenphotos'] += 1
 		else
@@ -263,10 +263,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'locker_nude_to_swim':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 2
 
-	if rand(0, 9)=0:
+	if rand(0,9) = 0:
 		if pav_swimpool['storeclerkvisit'] >= 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/photoclothing.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you put your swimwear on, you are startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
+			'As you put your swimwear on, you''re startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
 			'You''re certain that it sounded like that creepy store clerk''s camera, but you can''t see anything and quickly continue dressing yourself.'
 			pav_swimpool['storeclerkhiddenphotos'] += 1
 		else
@@ -287,12 +287,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'locker_clothed_to_swim':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	temp_rand = rand(0, 9)
+	temp_rand = rand(0,9)
 	! Clothed to nude
 	if temp_rand = 0:
 		if pav_swimpool['storeclerkvisit'] >= 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/photoclothing.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you take your clothes off, you are startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
+			'As you take your clothes off, you''re startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
 			'You''re certain that it sounded like that creepy store clerk''s camera, but you can''t see anything and just tell yourself that you''re being paranoid and continue getting dressed.'
 			pav_swimpool['storeclerkhiddenphotos'] += 1
 		else
@@ -303,7 +303,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'locker_clothed_to_swim':
 	elseif temp_rand = 1:
 		if pav_swimpool['storeclerkvisit'] >= 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/photoclothing.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you put your swimwear on, you are startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
+			'As you put your swimwear on, you''re startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
 			'You''re certain that it sounded like that creepy store clerk''s camera, but you can''t see anything and quickly continue dressing yourself.'
 			pav_swimpool['storeclerkhiddenphotos'] += 1
 		else
@@ -324,12 +324,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'locker_swim_to_clothed':
 	minut += 6
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	temp_rand = rand(0, 9)
+	temp_rand = rand(0,9)
 	! Swim to nude
 	if temp_rand = 0:
 		if pav_swimpool['storeclerkvisit'] >= 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/photoclothing.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you take your swimwear off, you are startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
+			'As you take your swimwear off, you''re startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
 			'You''re certain that it sounded like that creepy store clerk''s camera, but you can''t see anything and just tell yourself that you''re being paranoid and continue getting dressed.'
 			pav_swimpool['storeclerkhiddenphotos'] += 1
 		else
@@ -341,7 +341,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'locker_swim_to_clothed':
 	elseif temp_rand = 1:
 		if pav_swimpool['storeclerkvisit'] >= 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/photoclothing.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you change back into your clothes, you are startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
+			'As you change back into your clothes, you''re startled when you think you hear a camera click, as if someone was taking photos, but you don''t see anything.'
 			'You''re certain that it sounded like that creepy store clerk''s camera, but as you don''t see anything, you tell yourself you''re just being paranoid and continue getting dressed.'
 			pav_swimpool['storeclerkhiddenphotos'] += 1
 		else
@@ -382,7 +382,7 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0]= 'relaxedswim':
 	minut += 15
-	if pcs_sweat > 10: pcs_sweat = 10 + rand(0, 4)
+	if pcs_sweat > 10: pcs_sweat = 10 + rand(0,4)
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/relaxedswim2.jpg"></center>'
 	act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool', 'poolwater'
@@ -394,7 +394,7 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'relaxedswim':
 		'The pool is mostly used by families with children and older people at this time. It''s still quiet enough for you to enjoy your swim undisturbed.'
 		pcs_mood += 5
 		temp_rand = rand(1,10)
-		if     temp_rand = 1:
+		if temp_rand = 1:
 			cla
 			act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool_events', 'kidsplash'
 
@@ -428,7 +428,7 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'relaxedswim':
 		end
 	elseif hour >= 18 and hour < 21:
 		'Given how late in the evening it is, only a few adults are in the water, so you enjoy your swim undisturbed.'
-		if rand(1, 15) = 1:
+		if rand(1,15) = 1:
 			cla
 			act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool_events', 'late_assault'
 		end
@@ -444,13 +444,13 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'exerciseswim':
 	if hour >= 8 and hour < 10:
 		'The pool is almost empty, so you enjoy your swim a lot.'
 		gs 'exercise', 'tier1', 15, 'stren', 'vital'
-		fat -= rand(0, 4)
+		fat -= rand(0,4)
 		!!gs 'sweat', 'add', 5
 		!!pcs_agil += 1
 	elseif hour >= 10 and hour < 12:
 		'The pool is mostly used by families with children and older people at this time. You enjoy your swim mostly undisturbed.'
 		gs 'exercise', 'tier1', 15, 'stren', 'vital'
-		fat -= rand(0, 4)
+		fat -= rand(0,4)
 		!!gs 'sweat', 'add', 5
 		!!pcs_agil += 1
 	elseif hour >= 12 and hour < 18:
@@ -479,7 +479,7 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'exerciseswim':
 	elseif hour >= 18 and hour < 21:
 		'Given how late it is, only a few adults are in the water, so you enjoy your swim undisturbed.'
 		gs 'exercise', 'tier1', 15, 'stren', 'vital'
-		fat -= rand(0, 4)
+		fat -= rand(0,4)
 		!!gs 'sweat', 'add', 5
 		!!pcs_agil += 1
 		if rand(1, 15) = 1:
@@ -516,7 +516,7 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'dive':
 	elseif hour >= 18 and hour < 21:
 		'Given how late it is, only a few adults are in the water. You enjoy diving and seeing other people underwater with you from time to time.'
 		pcs_mood += 5
-		if rand(1, 15) = 1:
+		if rand(1,15) = 1:
 			cla
 			act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool_events', 'late_assault'
 		end
@@ -600,7 +600,7 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'relaxedwater':
 	elseif hour >= 18 and hour < 21:
 		'Given how late in the evening it is, only a few adults are in the pool, so you enjoy lying in the water mostly undisturbed.'
 		pcs_mood += 5
-		if rand(1, 15) = 1 and pav_swimpool['rape_event'] = 0 and hour > 20:
+		if rand(1,15) = 1 and pav_swimpool['rape_event'] = 0 and hour > 20:
 			cla
 			act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool_events', 'late_assault'
 		end
@@ -628,7 +628,7 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'feetwater':
 	elseif hour >= 12 and hour < 18:
 		'The pool is crowded with all kinds of people and sitting here is proving not to be as relaxing as you hoped. You get splashed with water from time to time.'
 		pcs_mood -= 1
-		temp_rand = rand(1, 10)
+		temp_rand = rand(1,10)
 		if temp_rand = 1:
 			'Some children push you from behind and you fall into the water as they run away snickering loudly.'
 			minut += 3
@@ -666,7 +666,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'watertoplost':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/losttop.jpg"></center>'
 	gs 'pav_pool_events', 'timedesc'
-	'You are topless in the water, a fact you''re trying to hide.'
+	'You''re topless in the water, a fact you''re trying to hide.'
 
 	if (hour >= 8 and hour < 12) or (hour >= 18 and hour < 21):
 		'You see the few people scattered around the pool looking at you from time to time.'
@@ -711,8 +711,7 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'WTL_nothinghappens':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/losttop.jpg"></center>'
 	gs 'pav_pool_events', 'timedesc'
-	'You wait around topless in the water for a while. You have to avoid some people from time to time, but you''re left alone.'
-	'You notice several people staring at you, but nobody disturbs you.'
+	'You wait around topless in the water for a while. You notice several people staring at you and have to avoid others from time to time, but nobody disturbs you.'
 	act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool_events', 'watertoplost'
 end
 
@@ -805,15 +804,14 @@ if $ARGS[0]= 'WTL_boystole':
 		gs 'stat'
 		pav_swimpool['boystole'] = 0
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/exposebreasts.jpg"></center>'
-
 		if tits <= 2:
 			'You look around before nodding and reluctantly removing your hands from your breasts. He dives down to take a look at you.'
 			'He immediately surfaces with a disappointed look on his face. "I wanted to see some tits! That fat kid over there has bigger tits than you!"'
-			'He returns your bikini top and swims away. You quickly put it back on before anyone sees you, feeling a little hurt by his comments.'
+			'He tosses your bikini top at you before swimming away in frustration. You quickly put it back on before anyone sees you, feeling a little hurt by his comments.'
 		elseif tits <= 5:
 			'You look around before nodding and reluctantly removing your hands from your breasts. He dives down to take a look at you.'
 			'He surfaces after a short while with a smile on his face. "Nice tits!"'
-			'He returns your bikini top and swims away. You quickly put it back on before anyone sees you.'
+			'He returns your bikini top and happily swims away. You quickly put it back on before anyone sees you.'
 		else
 			'You look around before nodding and reluctantly removing your hands from your breasts. He dives down to take a look at you.'
 			'After what feels like an eternity, he finally surfaces with a huge grin on his face. "Your tits are fucking huge! They''re bigger than my head!"'
@@ -870,7 +868,8 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'approachbehind':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/approachbehindhard.jpg"></center>'
 	'You''re at the edge of the pool with your back towards the water when you suddenly feel something hard pressing against your ass. As you turn around, you notice a fat older man resting his stomach against your back with what feels like his hard dick pressing against your ass.'
-	'You turn around with a look of shocked disgust on your face and he backs off. "Sorry, I fell..." he says with a grin as he leaves.'
+	'You turn around with a look of shocked disgust on your face and he backs off.'
+	'"Sorry, I fell..." he says with a grin as he leaves.'
 	pcs_mood -= 2
 	act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool', 'poolwater'
 end
@@ -974,7 +973,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sideflirt':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/ladder<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
 						'You slide out of his hands, climb out of the pool and make a dash for the locker room without looking back.'
-						'"Oh come on, I''m sure you would have enjoyed it!" he shouts at you as you flee.'
+						'"Oh come on!" he shouts at you as you flee.'
 						act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool', 'lockerfemale'
 					end
 				end
@@ -986,7 +985,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sideflirt':
 						gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/kisswater.jpg"></center>'
-						'You decide to accept the kiss. Your lips welcome each other and soon both your tongues entangle each other in a long deep kiss while he holds your face with both hands.'
+						'You decide to accept the kiss. Your lips welcome each other and soon both your tongues entangle each other in a long deep kiss as he holds your face with both hands.'
 						pav_swimpool['kiss_event'] = 1
 						act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool_events', 'edge_kiss'
 					end
@@ -1010,12 +1009,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'edge_kiss':
 		'He seems to takes your active involvement as permission for more and you feel his hand slide into your bikini bottom as his tongue continues exploring your mouth.'
 		'He starts massaging your clit as he continues making out with you. You start becoming incredibly aroused from the pleasure.'
 	elseif pav_swimpool['kiss_event'] = 2:
-		'Thanks to your submissiviness, he starts to take your body for granted; his hand slides into your bikini bottom as his tongue continues exploring your mouth.'
+		'Thanks to your submissiveness, he starts to take your body for granted; his hand slides into your bikini bottom as his tongue continues exploring your mouth.'
 		'He starts massaging your clit as he continues to make out with you. You remain frozen in place, still unsure about what''s happening.'
 	end
 
-	temp_rand = rand(1,3)
-	if temp_rand = 1:
+	temp_rand = rand(0,2)
+	if temp_rand = 0:
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/waterleave.jpg"></center>'
@@ -1023,14 +1022,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'edge_kiss':
 			'You fix your bikini bottom before climbing out of the pool and heading for the locker room. It''s getting late and you don''t really want to be here anymore.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool', 'lockerfemale'
 		end
-	elseif temp_rand = 2:
+	elseif temp_rand = 1:
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/blowforced.jpg"></center>'
 			'After a short while, he breaks the kiss. "Take a deep breath, you''ll need it!"'
 			'You barely manage to take a quick gulp of air before he shoves you under the water, where you''re greeted by the sight of his hard dick throbbing in front of you.'
 			if pav_swimpool['kiss_event'] = 1:
-				'He shoves his dick into your mouth and starts thrusting with great determination. You get the hint and start passionately sucking his dick.'
+				'He shoves his dick into your mouth and starts thrusting with great determination. You get the hint and start sucking his dick.'
 			elseif pav_swimpool['kiss_event'] = 2:
 				'He shoves his dick into your mouth and starts thrusting with great determination. You make efforts to break free from his grip as he fucks your unwilling mouth.'
 			end
@@ -1038,7 +1037,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'edge_kiss':
 			act 'Continue':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/cummouth.jpg"></center>'
-
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', -3, 'rough', 'sub'
 				$orgasm_or = 'no'
 				gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'pool stranger', 0
@@ -1091,7 +1089,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'edge_kiss':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/ladder<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
 				'You break the kiss and quickly push yourself away from him before pulling your bikini bottom back up. "What the fuck, asshole?! I''m not some cheap whore for you to fuck!" you shout at him angrily.'
-				'"Don''t tease guys if you''re going to be such a fucking prude about it! Whatever, bitch..." he scoffs before swimming away.'
+				'"Don''t tease guys if you''re going to be such a fucking prude about it then! Whatever, bitch..." he scoffs before swimming away.'
 				'Deciding it''s time to leave, you climb out of the pool and run to the locker room.'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool', 'lockerfemale'
@@ -1142,7 +1140,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'late_assault':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 2
 					gs 'stat'
-					'Your elbow makes contact with his nose and he reels back in pain, letting you go. You quickly make your way out of the pool before he can grab you again and run to the locker room without looking back. You can hear him loudly cursing about how you''ve broken his nose.'
+					'You jab your arm back and your elbow makes contact with his nose, causing him to reel back in pain and let you go. You quickly make your way out of the pool before he can grab you again and run to the locker room without looking back. You can hear him loudly cursing about how you''ve broken his nose.'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool', 'lockerfemale'
 				end
 			end
@@ -1172,27 +1170,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'late_assault':
 
 				act 'Continue':
 					*clr & cla
-					gs 'stat'
 					minut += 5
+					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/assault2.jpg"></center>'
 					'He starts violently thrusting in and out of your pussy, holding you by your hair and using it as a handle to apply more force. Your only thought is hoping this will end soon...'
 
 					act 'Continue':
 						*clr & cla
-						minut += 5
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/assault3.jpg"></center>'
 						'After a few minutes, he pulls you on top of him, slides you down onto his dick and resumes roughly fucking you.'
-						'Your attention wanders around the pool. To your dismay, it''s completely empty and you realize that nobody is coming to help you. Your thoughts are interrupted when your assailant suddenly groans and you feel a warmth spilling into your pussy. He''s cumming inside you!'
+						'Your attention wanders around the pool. To your dismay, it''s completely empty and you realize that nobody is coming to help you. Your thoughts are then interrupted when your assailant suddenly groans and you feel a warmth spilling into your pussy. He''s cumming inside you!'
 						'It might be shock, but you somehow manage to ignore the fact that you''re being filled with a stranger''s cum and instead concentrate on the eerie sounds of the deserted pool.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'rape'
 						gs 'cum_call', '', 'pool rapist', 0, '', 15000, 60
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
+						minut += 5
 						gs 'stat'
 
 						act 'Continue':
 							*clr & cla
-							gs 'stat'
 							minut += 5
+							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/swim/assault4.jpg"></center>'
 							'When he finishes emptying his load inside you, he pulls out and immediately plugs your pussy with his fingers before leaning in and whispering into your ear.'
 							'"Just making sure it stays in there. I want you to get pregnant with my baby so you can always remember what happened here. Don''t think about telling anyone either, because nobody will believe a slutty little bitch like you."'
@@ -1202,9 +1200,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'late_assault':
 							elseif pav_swimpool['virgin_rape'] = 1:
 								'You start sobbing as your emotions overwhelm you. That man defiled your womanhood and wants you to get pregnant from it! You clutch your stomach. That''s likely to happen given that you''re not on birth control. "What am I going to do?!" you think to yourself as a sharp pain suddenly shoots through your sore and tender pussy. You can''t find your bikini bottom, so you slowly climb out of the pool and make your way to the locker room, trying not to think about what happened.'
 							elseif birth_control['think_safe'] = 1:
-								'You place a hand on your stomach. Even though you can feel his sperm inside you, you''re on birth control and so shouldn''t need to worry about getting pregnant. You can''t find your bikini bottom, so you climb out of the pool and quickly make your way to the locker room, trying not to think about what happened.'
+								'You place a hand on your stomach, even though you''re on birth control and shouldn''t need to worry about getting pregnant. You can''t find your bikini bottom, so you climb out of the pool and quickly make your way to the locker room, trying not to think about what happened.'
 							else
-								'You place a hand on your stomach and hold in your sobs. You can feel his sperm inside you and hope that his words about you getting pregnant don''t come true. You can''t find your bikini bottom, so you climb out of the pool and quickly make your way to the locker room, trying not to think about what happened.'
+								'You place a hand on your stomach and hold in your sobs, hoping that his words about you getting pregnant don''t come true. You can''t find your bikini bottom, so you climb out of the pool and quickly make your way to the locker room, trying not to think about what happened.'
 							end
 							act 'Continue': gt 'pav_pool', 'lockerfemale'
 						end