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locations/anushkaev2.qsrc

@@ -6,21 +6,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushrad':
 	menu_off = 1
 	AnushkaLoc = 2
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyrad1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Anushka gets on the bed on all fours in her underwear and wiggles her ass around. "Damn! You have one of the finest asses I''ve ever seen, you know that Nush?" You can tell by the voice that it is Radomir. He gives her ass a good squeeze with his hand, then grabs her panties and pulls them down, roughly jerking them off and tossing them aside. He then starts playing with her bare ass and rubbing her pussy with his fingers.'
+	'Anushka gets on the bed on all fours in her underwear and wiggles her ass around. "Damn! You have one of the finest asses I''ve ever seen, you know that Nush?" You can tell by the voice that it''s Radomir. He gives her ass a good squeeze with his hand, then grabs her panties and pulls them down, roughly jerking them off and tossing them aside. He then starts playing with her bare ass and rubbing her pussy with his fingers.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Leave apartment': gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'pav_complex','start'
 	act 'Keep watching':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyrad2.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Fuck, I am so hard! Come on and suck my dick." he says after giving her a slap hard enough to leave a red outline of his hand on her ass. She yelps a little, but turns around and starts sucking his dick. Before too long, he grabs her by the sides of the head and starts fucking her mouth, gagging her as he shoves his dick balls deep down her throat. He then forces his dick balls deep into her mouth and holds her there for several seconds, causing her to choke and gag. He then pulls his dick out of her mouth, leaving her choking and gasping for breath.'
+		'"Fuck, I''m so hard! Hurry up and suck my dick!" he says after giving her a slap hard enough to leave a red outline of his hand on her ass. She yelps a little, but turns around and starts sucking his dick. Before too long, he grabs her by the sides of the head and starts fucking her mouth, gagging her as he shoves his dick balls deep down her throat. He then forces his dick balls deep into her mouth and holds her there for several seconds, causing her to choke and gag before he pulls his dick out of her mouth, leaving her choking and gasping for breath.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5, 'rough'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave apartment': gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'pav_complex','start'
 		act 'Keep watching':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyrad3.jpg"></center>'
-			'While she is catching her breath, he grabs her by the leg, spins her around and drags her towards him until her ass is almost hanging off the edge of the bed. He pushes her legs apart and shoves his dick in her pussy. She winces a little and bites her lower lip, obviously not as wet and ready as she would have liked. He doesn''t seem to notice or doesn''t care as he starts hammering away at her pussy, balls deep. Each thrust makes her grunt, but these slowly turn into moans of pleasure.'
+			'While she''s catching her breath, he grabs her by the leg, spins her around and drags her towards him until her ass is almost hanging off the edge of the bed. He pushes her legs apart and shoves his dick into her pussy. She winces a little and bites her lower lip, obviously not as wet and ready as she would have liked. He doesn''t seem to notice or doesn''t care as he starts hammering away at her pussy, balls deep. Each thrust makes her grunt, but these slowly turn into moans of pleasure.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Leave apartment': gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'pav_complex','start'
@@ -29,9 +29,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushrad':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'boyStat', 'A154'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyrad4.jpg"></center>'
-				'Just as she is starting to moan in pleasure, he pulls out of her and flips her over, grabbing her ass and giving her cheek a hard squeeze, followed by another hard slap that leaves a red outline of his hand behind, causing her to yelp again. "Fuck, you have such a nice ass Nush." She apparently knows what that means, and she quickly grabs the bottle of lube out of her night stand. But before she can use it, he grabs it from her. "Give me that, you always use too much." he growls before squirting just a little onto the head of his dick and rubbing it down the shaft. Once he''s done, he briefly rubs his fingers between her cheeks. It doesn''t look like he used much lube.'
-				*nl
-				'He pushes her down until she is on her stomach and tosses the bottle aside before he leans forward, pushing his dick between her cheeks as she struggles a bit. "You didn''t use enough lube!" she winces as he keeps struggling to penetrate her. "Shut up Nush, this feels better. You''re so fucking tight!" he says and shoves his hips forward hard, which causes her to jump a little and cry out in pain. "Oh fuck that hurt! You need to use more lube!" she protests in a stressed voice, but he pushes her head against the mattress. You can see her wincing in pain and white knuckling her grip on the bed sheets. "See? I knew you didn''t need much lube." he says as he struggles to force his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick into her ass, moaning in pleasure as he does.'
+				'Just as she''s starting to moan in pleasure, he pulls out of her and flips her over, grabbing her ass and giving her cheek a hard squeeze, followed by another hard slap that leaves a red outline of his hand behind, causing her to yelp again. "Fuck, you have such a nice ass Nush." She apparently knows what that means, and she quickly grabs the bottle of lube out of her night stand. Before she can use it, he grabs it from her. "Give me that, you always use too much." he growls before squirting just a little onto the head of his dick and rubbing it down the shaft. Once he''s done, he briefly rubs his fingers between her cheeks.'
+				'He pushes her down until she''s on her stomach and tosses the bottle aside before he leans forward, pushing his dick between her cheeks as she struggles a little. "You didn''t use enough lube!" she winces as he keeps struggling to penetrate her. "Shut up Nush, this feels better. You''re so fucking tight!" he says and shoves his hips forward hard, which causes her to jump a little and cry out in pain. "Oh fuck that hurt! You need to use more lube!" she protests in a stressed voice, but he pushes her head against the mattress. You can see her wincing in pain and white knuckling her grip on the bed sheets. "See? I knew you didn''t need much lube." he says as he struggles to force his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick into her ass, moaning in pleasure as he does.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Leave apartment': gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'pav_complex','start'
@@ -39,15 +38,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushrad':
 					*clr & cla
 					if rand(1,5) = 1:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/caughtspying.jpg"></center>'
-						'As you are watching you are so caught up in the action, you don''t notice your hand slide down to your own crotch, nor hear the footsteps heading your way.'
-						'"What you doing?" Maksim says. You nearly jump out of your skin, you blush as you look back at him and curse yourself for being so foolish as to let yourself be caught spying Anushka having sex.'
-						'You feel your stomach really drop when you see the phone in his hand, he was recording you spying. "Uh... I ... nothing..." Even to your own ears that sound lame, but what can you say, he caught you in the act.'
+						'As you''re watching, you''re so caught up in the action that you don''t notice your hand slide down to your crotch, nor hear the footsteps heading your way.'
+						'"What are you doing?" You nearly jump out of your skin and blush when you look back and see Maksim, cursing to yourself for being so foolish as to let yourself be caught spying.'
+						'You feel your stomach really drop when you see the phone in his hand. He was recording you. "Uh... I ... Nothing..." you sheepishly reply.'
 						*nl
-						'"Well this recording says otherwise. Maybe I should show Nush and Rad what you was doing." You reach for the phone but he pulls it away and pushes a button. "There I just uploaded to the cloud. But maybe we can work something out... hmm?" His grin is so huge and he just looks so smug.'
-						'You sigh, the little bastard. "What do you want?"'
-						'He grins even bigger and looks even more smug, if that is possible. "What ever I want."'
+						'"Well this recording says otherwise. Maybe I should show Anushka and Rad what you were doing?" You reach for the phone, but he pulls it away and pushes a button. "There. I just uploaded to the cloud. Maybe we can work something out?" His smug grin is huge.'
+						'You sigh in defeat. "What do you want?"'
+						'He grins even wider and looks even more smug. "Whatever I want."'
 						*nl
-						'You start to shake your head no, but before you can tell him to go get bent he adds on. "Just little stuff, like show me your tits when I want, buy me a girly mag, stuff like that." You start to tell him to fuck off and then stop, you are sure Anushka wouldn''t care, but Rad... what if he told everyone in school, everyone would think you was some kind of pervert and it would really hurt your rep. But do you want Maksim to lord this over you for who knows how long?'
+						'You start to shake your head, but before you can tell him to get lost, he interrupts you. "Just little stuff, like showing me your tits when I want, buying me a girly mag, stuff like that." You''re about to tell him fuck off, but stop. You''re sure Anushka wouldn''t care, but Radomir... What if he told everyone in school? On the other hand, do you want Maksim to lord this over you for who knows how long?'
 						act 'Agree': gt 'anushkamaksim','maksim_blackmail'
 						gs 'willpower', 'action', 'resist', 'medium'
 						if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -57,10 +56,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushrad':
 								gs 'stat'
 								minut += 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksim.jpg"></center>'
-								'"Fuck off you little shit." You tell him and smirk a bit as his surprised expression, he obviously expected you to agree.'
-								'Then he gets angry. "Fine bitch, I will just go show her."'
-								'You smirk to him. "Go right in, go in while your sister is having sex, I am sure they won''t mind and if you wait till they finish I am sure your sister won''t mind you was trying to blackmail one of her friends. Who do you think she will be more pissed at?"'
-								'He snears at you, pauses a moment then angerly walks away.'
+								'"Fuck off, you little shit!" you snarl and smirk at his surprised expression.'
+								'Anger washes over him. "Fine, bitch! I''ll just go show her."'
+								'You smirk at him. "Go ahead, go in there while your sister is having sex. I''m sure they won''t mind. If you wait until they''re finished, then I''m sure your sister won''t mind that you were trying to blackmail one of her friends. Who do you think she''ll be more pissed at?"'
+								'He sneers at you and pauses before angrily walking away.'
 								act 'Leave apartment': gt 'pav_complex','start'
 								act 'Wait for Rad to leave': gt 'anushkaev2','wait_nushrad'
 							end
@@ -69,7 +68,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushrad':
 						end
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyrad5.jpg"></center>'
-						'He pulls his dick almost all the way out of her asshole and then slams it back in balls deep, moaning with pleasure as she cries out and winces in pain. She tries to pull away, but he roughly pulls her back. "Not so fucking hard!"'
+						'He pulls his dick almost all the way out of her asshole before slamming it back in balls deep, moaning with pleasure as she cries out and winces in pain. She tries to pull away, but he roughly pulls her back. "Not so fucking hard!"'
 						'"Oh please! You bitches love getting pounded like the sluts you are! So just shut the fuck up and enjoy it!" he says and starts hammering her ass even harder. She grunts loudly in pain with the occasional moan of pleasure, but you don''t think he can tell the difference, or just doesn''t care.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -77,23 +76,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushrad':
 						act 'Keep watching':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyrad6.jpg"></center>'
-							'He grabs hold of her hips and pulls her up until she is on her knees. He then shoves her face down into the mattress and goes back to hammering away at her ass. She places a hand on his hip in an effort to slow him down a little, but he just roughly shoves her hand away and slaps her hard on the ass. She tries several more times to reach back and slow him down, but he roughly shoves her hands away each time. "Please Rad, slow down or use more lube!" she pleads. "Fucking take it bitch, take it!" he growls and just seems to fuck her ass even harder.'
+							'He grabs hold of her hips and pulls her up until she''s on her knees. He then shoves her face down into the mattress and goes back to hammering away at her ass. She places a hand on his hip in an effort to slow him down a little, but he just roughly shoves her hand away and slaps her hard on the ass. She tries several more times to reach back and slow him down, but he roughly shoves her hands away each time. "Please Rad, slow down or use more lube!" she pleads. "Fucking take it bitch, take it!" he growls and just seems to fuck her ass even harder.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Leave apartment': gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'pav_complex','start'
 							act 'Keep watching':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyrad7.jpg"></center>'
-								'She starts pulling away, but he leans forward as she does, putting more weight on her. Slowly her hips are forced down until she is lying flat on her stomach again. He clamps his hands on her hips, pinning her in place between him and the mattress to keep her from pulling away more. Her bed sheets are tightly balled up in her clenched fists as she white knuckle grips the sheets. "Please Rad, just slow down a little. Please!" she pleads, but continues to ignore her pleas and keeps hammering away at her ass. "Fuck yes! God damn, I''m about to bust a nut!"'
+								'She starts pulling away, but he leans forward as she does, putting more weight on her. Her hips are slowly forced down until she''s lying flat on her stomach again. He clamps his hands on her hips, pinning her in place between him and the mattress to keep her from pulling away more. Her bed sheets are tightly balled up in her clenched fists as she white knuckle grips the sheets. "Please Rad, just slow down a little. Please!" she pleads, but he continues to ignore her pleas and keeps hammering away at her ass. "Fuck yes! God damn, I''m about to bust a nut!"'
 								gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Leave apartment': gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'pav_complex','start'
 								act 'Climax':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyrad8.jpg"></center>'
-									'He suddenly pulls his dick out of her asshole and starts cumming all over her cheeks, moaning loudly as he does. She lets out a sigh as a relieved look washes over her face. When he finishes cumming, he lets go of her and steps away. "Fuck Nush, you''re the best fucking slut I have ever fucked. I''ll never get tired of fucking your tight little ass."'
-									*nl
-									'Despite how he treated her, she looks back to him with a smile and seems to be basking in the praise he is now giving her. He barely even looks at her as he starts getting dressed and she wipes the cum from her ass before getting dressed as well. "Well I''ve got to go, I''ve got things to do." He pauses for a moment when he notices how gingerly she is moving. "You good?" She gives him a sarcastic gaze, followed by a fairly dirty look. "No, my fucking asshole is on fire!" He laughs loudly, apparently finding it pretty funny. "What can I say? Sucks to be a hoe! Aching holes is your lot in life." Without another glance or word, he strides for the door as she flips him off behind his back and mutters "Fucking asshole..."'
+									'He suddenly pulls his dick out of her asshole and starts cumming over her cheeks, moaning loudly as he does. She lets out a sigh as a relieved look washes over her face. When he finishes cumming, he lets go of her and steps away. "Fuck Nush, you''re the best fucking slut I''ve ever fucked. I''ll never get tired of fucking your tight little ass."'
+									'Despite how he treated her, she looks back at him with a smile and seems to be basking in the praise he''s now giving her. He barely even looks at her as he starts getting dressed and she wipes the cum from her ass before getting dressed as well. "Well I''ve got to go, I''ve got things to do." He pauses for a moment when he notices how gingerly she is moving. "You good?" She gives him a sarcastic gaze, followed by a fairly dirty look. "No, my fucking asshole is on fire!" He laughs loudly, apparently finding it pretty funny. "What can I say? Sucks to be a hoe! Aching holes is your lot in life." Without another glance or word, he strides for the door as she flips him off behind his back and mutters "Fucking asshole..."'
 									gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 									gs 'stat'
 									gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -114,40 +112,40 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wait_nushrad':
 	minut += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big154.jpg"></center>'
 	if hotcat >= 6:
-		'You only take a couple of steps from the door when it opens and turn like you were just heading to the room. He gives you a knowing smirk. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, why don''t you join us next time? I wouldn''t mind giving you the fucking of your life. I''m sure Nush wouldn''t mind either since her ass could use a break. She finds me a bit too big, but what can a guy do?" he asks rhetorically with a laugh.'
+		'You only take a few steps from the door when it opens and turn like you were just heading to the room. He gives you a knowing smirk. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, why don''t you join us next time? I wouldn''t mind giving you the fucking of your life. I''m sure Nush wouldn''t mind either since her ass could use a break. She finds me a bit too big, but what can a guy do?" he asks rhetorically with a laugh.'
 		act 'Say nothing':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big154.jpg"></center>'
 			'Before you can think of a reply, he walks briskly past you and heads for the apartment door. You open Anushka''s door and walk in, deciding not to say anything about what you just saw.'
-			act 'Go in her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
+			act 'Enter her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
 		end
 		act 'You don''t have to be so rough':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 2
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big154.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Well you could try not being so rough with her." you tell him.'
-			'He snorts and shakes his head. "Please! She is just like all you bitches - she loves every minute of it. I could come back later and she would just roll over, spread those cheeks and let me fuck her ass again. No matter how much she whines and cries about it, she''s always ready for another good ass fucking."'
+			'"Well you could try not being so rough with her," you tell him.'
+			'He snorts and shakes his head. "Please! She''s just like all you bitches - she loves every minute of it. I could come back later and she would just roll over, spread those cheeks and let me fuck her ass again. No matter how much she whines and cries about it, she''s always ready for another good ass fucking."'
 			*nl
 			'You''re not really sure what to say. If she didn''t like it, why would she keep letting him do it? You don''t get to find out since he already left while you were lost in your thoughts. You open Anushka''s door and walk in, deciding not to say anything about what you just saw.'
-			act 'Go in her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
+			act 'Enter her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
 		end
 	else
-		'You only take a couple of steps from the door when it opens and turn like you were just heading to the room. He gives you a slight frown of disgust. "You know if you took better care of yourself, I might give you the fucking of your life too. But I''ve got standards, you know. Now Nush, that''s a fine piece of ass right there." he says while hooking his thumb over his shoulder and pointing back towards her room.'
+		'You only take a few steps from the door when it opens and turn like you were just heading to the room. He gives you a slight frown of disgust. "You know if you took better care of yourself, I might give you the fucking of your life too. But I''ve got standards, you know. Now Nush, that''s a fine piece of ass right there," he says while hooking his thumb over his shoulder and pointing back towards her room.'
 		act 'Say nothing':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big154.jpg"></center>'
 			'Before you can think of a reply, he walks briskly past you and heads for the apartment door to leave. You open Anushka''s door and walk in, deciding not to say anything about what you just saw.'
-			act 'Go in her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
+			act 'Enter her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
 		end
 		act 'You don''t have to be so rough':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 2
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big154.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Well you don''t have to be so rough with her." you tell him.'
-			'He snorts and shakes his head. "Please! She is like all you bitches - she loves every minute of it. I could come back later and she would just roll over, spread those cheeks and let me fuck her ass again. No matter how much she whines and cries about it, she is always ready for another good ass fucking." He then pauses and laughs. "Well you would understand if you ever found a guy willing to fuck you at least." he says as if the mere thought of it disgusts him.'
+			'"Well you don''t have to be so rough with her," you tell him.'
+			'He snorts and shakes his head. "Please! She''s like all you bitches - she loves every minute of it. I could come back later and she would just roll over, spread those cheeks and let me fuck her ass again. No matter how much she whines and cries about it, she is always ready for another good ass fucking." He then pauses and laughs. "Well you would understand if you ever found a guy willing to fuck you at least." he says as if the mere thought of it disgusts him.'
 			*nl
-			'You''re not really sure what to say. Then he suddenly bursts out laughing. "Oh fuck you was spying on us wasn''t you?" You blush when he realizes what you was doing, your blush only makes him laugh harder as he walks up the hall, you can hear him laughing until he walks out of the apartment and closes the door.'
-			act 'Go in her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
+			'You''re not really sure what to say before he suddenly bursts out laughing. "Oh fuck. You were spying on us, weren''t you?" You blush when he realizes what you were doing, which only makes him laugh harder. You can hear him laughing until he walks out of the apartment and closes the door.'
+			act 'Enter her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
 		end
 	end
 end
@@ -162,8 +160,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rad3some':
 		'You walk in, confident you''ll be joining them. Closing the door behind you, you walk up to the bed where Radomir is still hammering away at Anushka''s pussy. After a few seconds, Anushka notices you and gives you a grin. "Oh hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, what''s up?" she asks through grunts and moans as Radomir keeps hammering away. He only stops once she speaks to you, turning his head to give you a once over from head to toe.'
 		'You smile in return. "You look like you''re having fun, so I thought I might as well join you."'
 		*nl
-		'Anushka glances at Radomir. "It''s fine by me, Rad." she tells him.'
-		'He grins as he rolls off Anushka and onto his back on the bed, his dick pointing straight up. "Of course you did <<$pcs_nickname>>, and who could blame you?" he says in a cocky tone. He then glances at Anshuka and back to you. "Don''t worry, girls. There is enough of me to go around." he says with a laugh as he looks at you. Anushka rolls her eyes at his comment and sits at his side. "Well, come on <<$pcs_nickname>>. Make that pretty mouth of yours useful." he says, indicting his cock.'
+		'Anushka glances at Radomir. "It''s fine by me, Rad."'
+		'He grins as he rolls off Anushka and onto his back on the bed, his dick pointing straight up. "Of course you did <<$pcs_nickname>>, and who could blame you?" he says in a cocky tone. He then glances at Anshuka and back to you. "Don''t worry, girls. There is enough of me to go around." he says with a laugh as he looks at you. Anushka rolls her eyes at his comment and sits at his side. "Well, come on <<$pcs_nickname>>. Make that pretty mouth of yours useful," he says, indicting his cock.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Suck his dick':
@@ -201,7 +199,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rad3some':
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/join/rad/radnushs3.jpg"></center>'
 						'Radomir doesn''t seem to care whether this hurts or not. He just keeps hammering your backdoor without mercy. After a few minutes, it starts to hurt so much you can''t take it anymore. "Slow down and don''t be so rough! It hurts!" you whimper.'
 						'He just ignores you and keeps hammering at your ass. "STOP! It fucking hurts!" you plead as you try and scoot away from him.'
-						'He grabs you by the hips and drags you back, then pauses to pull his dick almost completely out of you before hammering it back in balls deep. "Shut the fuck up and take it like the slut you are!" He pounds your hole even harder now.'
+						'He grabs you by the hips and drags you back, pausing to pull his dick almost completely out of you before hammering it back in balls deep. "Shut the fuck up and take it like the slut you are!" He pounds your hole even harder now.'
 						'Anushka speaks up. "Stop being such a fucking jerk and ease up, Rad." He ignores her as well and keeps fucking your ass.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'group', 'lesbian', 'rough', 'lube'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -217,9 +215,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rad3some':
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/join/radnushleave.jpg"></center>'
 								'You put your feet against him and push while pulling his hands off your hips. You manage to slide away from him and finally feel the relief of his dick sliding out of your asshole. "I said to fucking stop!" you yell.'
 								'He stops trying to pull you back, confused. "What the fuck is your problem <<$pcs_nickname>>?" he angrily asks.'
-								'"You were way too fucking rough is what my problem is." you snarl as you slide off the bed, gather up your discarded clothes and get dressed.'
+								'"You were way too fucking rough is what my problem is!" you snarl as you slide off the bed, gather up your discarded clothes and get dressed.'
 								'He rolls his eyes. "Oh please, all you bitches like to be fucked hard and rough and you know it."'
-								'You just shake your head at him. "No means no and stop means stop, Rad!" you tell him.'
+								'You just shake your head at him. "No means no and stop means stop, Rad!"'
 								'"Then get the fuck out! No one invited you anyway." he snarls.'
 								'Anushka, still kneeling on the bed next to where Radomir is standing, finally interjects. "Chill out and stop being an asshole, Rad."'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -430,7 +428,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushval':
 	menu_off = 1
 	AnushkaLoc = 2
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyval1.jpg"></center>'
-	'As you watch, Anushka leans forward and starts sucking on the hard dick and you hear the guy moaning in pleasure. "Fuck Nush, you suck cock better than anyone." You can tell by the voice that it is Valentin.'
+	'As you watch, Anushka leans forward and starts sucking on the hard dick and you hear the guy moaning in pleasure. "Fuck Nush, you suck cock better than anyone." You can tell by the voice that it''s Valentin.'
 	'She keeps bobbing her head up and down on his dick while she flips him off as a reply to his comment, which just makes him laugh. She slowly strips her clothes as she continues sucking.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -438,7 +436,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushval':
 	act 'Keep watching':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyval2.jpg"></center>'
-		'Once she is naked, she turns around so they are 69ing each other and you push the door open just a little more so you can see all the action. Valentin is eagerly lapping at her pussy as she continues to give him head. You know you really shouldn''t be spying and that you could be caught at any moment.'
+		'Once she''s naked, she turns around so they are 69ing each other and you push the door open just a little more so you can see all the action. Valentin is eagerly lapping at her pussy as she continues to give him head. You know you really shouldn''t be spying and that you could be caught at any moment.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave apartment': gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'pav_complex','start'
@@ -455,15 +453,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushval':
 				*clr & cla
 				if rand(1,5) = 1 and maksim_blackmail ! 1:
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/caughtspying.jpg"></center>'
-					'As you are watching you are so caught up in the action, you don''t notice your hand slide down to your own crotch, nor hear the footsteps heading your way.'
-					'"What you doing?" Maksim says. You nearly jump out of your skin, you blush as you look back at him and curse yourself for being so foolish as to let yourself be caught spying Anushka having sex.'
-					'You feel your stomach really drop when you see the phone in his hand, he was recording you spying. "Uh... I ... nothing..." Even to your own ears that sound lame, but what can you say, he caught you in the act.'
+					'As you''re watching, you''re so caught up in the action that you don''t notice your hand slide down to your crotch, nor hear the footsteps heading your way.'
+					'"What are you doing?" You nearly jump out of your skin and blush when you look back and see Maksim, cursing to yourself for being so foolish as to let yourself be caught spying.'
+					'You feel your stomach really drop when you see the phone in his hand. He was recording you. "Uh... I ... Nothing..." you sheepishly reply.'
 					*nl
-					'"Well this recording says otherwise. Maybe I should show Nush and Val what you was doing." You reach for the phone but he pulls it away and pushes a button. "There I just uploaded to the cloud. But maybe we can work something out... hmm?" His grin is so huge and he just looks so smug.'
-					'You sigh, the little bastard. "What do you want?"'
-					'He grins even bigger and looks even more smug, if that is possible. "What ever I want."'
+					'"Well this recording says otherwise. Maybe I should show Anushka and Val what you were doing?" You reach for the phone, but he pulls it away and pushes a button. "There. I just uploaded to the cloud. Maybe we can work something out?" His smug grin is huge.'
+					'You sigh in defeat. "What do you want?"'
+					'He grins even wider and looks even more smug. "Whatever I want."'
 					*nl
-					'You start to shake your head no, but before you can tell him to go get bent he adds on. "Just little stuff, like show me your tits when I want, buy me a girly mag, stuff like that." You start to tell him to fuck off and then stop, you are sure Anushka wouldn''t care, but Val... what if he told everyone in school, everyone would think you was some kind of pervert and it would really hurt your rep. But do you want Maksim to lord this over you for who knows how long?'
+					'You start to shake your head, but before you can tell him to get lost, he interrupts you. "Just little stuff, like showing me your tits when I want, buying me a girly mag, stuff like that." You''re about to tell him fuck off, but stop. You''re sure Anushka wouldn''t care, but Valentin... What if he told everyone in school? On the other hand, do you want Maksim to lord this over you for who knows how long?'
 					act 'Agree': gt 'anushkamaksim','maksim_blackmail'
 					gs 'willpower', 'action', 'resist', 'medium'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -473,10 +471,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushval':
 							gs 'stat'
 							minut += 1
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksim.jpg"></center>'
-							'"Fuck off you little shit." You tell him and smirk a bit as his surprised expression, he obviously expected you to agree.'
-							'Then he gets angry. "Fine bitch, I will just go show her."'
-							'You smirk to him. "Go right in, go in while your sister is having sex, I am sure they won''t mind and if you wait till they finish I am sure your sister won''t mind you was trying to blackmail one of her friends. Who do you think she will be more pissed at?"'
-							'He snears at you, pauses a moment then angerly walks away.'
+							'"Fuck off, you little shit!" you snarl and smirk at his surprised expression.'
+							'Anger washes over him. "Fine, bitch! I''ll just go show her."'
+							'You smirk at him. "Go ahead, go in there while your sister is having sex. I''m sure they won''t mind. If you wait until they''re finished, then I''m sure your sister won''t mind that you were trying to blackmail one of her friends. Who do you think she''ll be more pissed at?"'
+							'He sneers at you and pauses before angrily walking away.'
 							act 'Leave apartment': gt 'pav_complex','start'
 							act 'Wait for Val to leave': gt 'anushkaev2','wait_nushval'
 						end
@@ -505,9 +503,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushval':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spyval6.jpg"></center>'
 							'"I''m about to cum!" he groans and pulls his cock out of her ass, slides off the bed and starts jerking his dick. Anushka quickly slides off the bed snd onto her knees in front of him. She leans her head back and opens her mouth just in time for his load of cum to explode across her face.'
 							*nl
-							'Most of it ends up on her forehead and nose, but some of it ends up in her open mouth. He milks the last few drops of cum out of his dick, letting them land on her tongue. "Fuck, that was amazing." he says as she swallows what was in her mouth. They both start getting dressed as she cleans his cum off her face. Once she is cleaned up, he kisses her on the forehead. "I need to get going babe. I need to see that guy about a part for my bike."'
+							'Most of it ends up on her forehead and nose, but some of it ends up in her open mouth. He milks the last few drops of cum out of his dick, letting them land on her tongue. "Fuck, that was amazing." he says as she swallows what was in her mouth. They both start getting dressed as she cleans his cum off her face. Once she''s cleaned up, he kisses her on the forehead. "I need to get going babe. I need to see that guy about a part for my bike."'
 							*nl
-							'She sits down on her bed and smirks at him. "Whatever, I got what I needed. You can go."'
+							'She sits on her bed and smirks at him. "Whatever, I got what I needed. You can go."'
 							'He laughs and bows slightly. "Why thank you your majesty, I''m glad I could be of service." They both laugh and he turns towards the door. You quickly close it before you''re spotted.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -527,8 +525,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wait_nushval':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big158.jpg"></center>'
-	'You only take a couple of steps from the door when it opens and turn like you were just heading to the room. He looks a little surprised to see you, but smiles. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, Anushka is in her room if you''re looking for her. I need to get going, got to get this part for my bike." he explains as he walks past you. "See''ya around" With that, he walks towards the front door and leaves. You open Anushka''s door and walk in, deciding not to say anything about what you just saw.'
-	act 'Go in her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
+	'You only take a few steps from the door when it opens and turn like you were just heading to the room. He looks a little surprised to see you, but smiles. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, Anushka is in her room if you''re looking for her. I need to get going, got to get this part for my bike..." he explains as he walks past you. "See you around." With that, he walks towards the front door and leaves. You open Anushka''s door and walk in, deciding not to say anything about what you just saw.'
+	act 'Enter her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'val3some':
@@ -718,8 +716,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'val3some':
 		'You walk in, confident you''ll be joining them, and close the door. As you do, Valentin grabs Anushka and flips them both over. She lets out a little squeal as he does and now he is on top of her, pumping away. You manage to walk all the way over to the bed before Anushka finally notices you, surprised as to why you''re standing there. "What the fuck? What are you doing here?" she says in a confused tone. Valentin seems puzzled before he turns his head, seemingly surprised to see you.  "Uh... hey <<$pcs_nickname>>?" he says in a somewhat confused tone.'
 		'Your smile falters at their reaction. "It looked like you guys were having fun, so I thought I could join in as well..."'
 		*nl
-		'Anushka hesitates for a moment. "<<$pcs_nickname>> uh... No, I don''t think so." she says while shaking her head.'
-		'Feeling a bit rejected. "Oh... sorry... I didn''t mean to disturb you guys." Not really knowing what else to say.'
+		'Anushka hesitates for a moment. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, uh... No, I don''t think so," she says while shaking her head.'
+		'You feel a little rejected. "Oh... sorry... I didn''t mean to disturb you guys."'
 		'Valentin clears his throat and gives a pointed look to the door. Getting the hint, you walk to the door and walk out. Closing it behind you, you quickly leave the apartment.'
 		act 'Leave apartment': gt 'pav_complex','start'
 	end
@@ -738,7 +736,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'talkaboutval':
 	'She laughs a little. "Fuck you... yeah whatever, I like being fucked in the ass. It <i>really</i> makes me cum."'
 	*nl
 	'You laugh as well. "So are you two..."'
-	'Before you can finish your sentence, she interrupts. "No, no we are just friends who occasionally fuck is all. It''t fun and that''s all it is."'
+	'Before you can finish your sentence, she interrupts. "No, no we''re just friends who occasionally fuck is all. It''t fun and that''s all it is."'
 	'You smile at her. "Just friends that fuck huh?"'
 	'She rolls her eyes slightly. "Yeah, just friends that fuck."'
 	act 'Hang out in her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
@@ -814,15 +812,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushmar':
 				*clr & cla
 				if rand(1,5) = 1 and maksim_blackmail ! 1:
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/caughtspying.jpg"></center>'
-					'As you are watching you are so caught up in the action, you don''t notice your hand slide down to your own crotch, nor hear the footsteps heading your way.'
-					'"What you doing?" Maksim says. You nearly jump out of your skin, you blush as you look back at him and curse yourself for being so foolish as to let yourself be caught spying Anushka having sex.'
-					'You feel your stomach really drop when you see the phone in his hand, he was recording you spying. "Uh... I ... nothing..." Even to your own ears that sound lame, but what can you say, he caught you in the act.'
+					'As you''re watching, you''re so caught up in the action that you don''t notice your hand slide down to your crotch, nor hear the footsteps heading your way.'
+					'"What are you doing?" You nearly jump out of your skin and blush when you look back and see Maksim, cursing to yourself for being so foolish as to let yourself be caught spying.'
+					'You feel your stomach really drop when you see the phone in his hand. He was recording you. "Uh... I ... Nothing..." you sheepishly reply.'
 					*nl
-					'"Well this recording says otherwise. Maybe I should show Nush and the black guy what you was doing." He says in disgust at the mention of black guy. You reach for the phone but he pulls it away and pushes a button. "There I just uploaded to the cloud. But maybe we can work something out... hmm?" His grin is so huge and he just looks so smug.'
-					'You sigh, the little bastard. "What do you want? And his name is Marcus."'
-					'He gives a look of disgust you know his name. "What ever, BBC whore." Then he grins even bigger and looks even more smug, if that is possible. "You will do what ever I want."'
+					'"Well this recording says otherwise. Maybe I should show Anushka and Marcus what you were doing?" You reach for the phone, but he pulls it away and pushes a button. "There. I just uploaded to the cloud. Maybe we can work something out?" His smug grin is huge.'
+					'You sigh in defeat. "What do you want?"'
+					'He grins even wider and looks even more smug. "Whatever I want."'
 					*nl
-					'You start to shake your head no, but before you can tell him to go get bent he adds on. "Just little stuff, like show me your tits when I want, buy me a girly mag, stuff like that." You start to tell him to fuck off and then stop, you are sure Anushka wouldn''t care, but Marcus... what if he told everyone in school, everyone would think you was some kind of pervert and it would really hurt your rep. But do you want Maksim to lord this over you for who knows how long?'
+					'You start to shake your head, but before you can tell him to get lost, he interrupts you. "Just little stuff, like showing me your tits when I want, buying me a girly mag, stuff like that." You''re about to tell him fuck off, but stop. You''re sure Anushka wouldn''t care, but Marcus... What if he told everyone in school? On the other hand, do you want Maksim to lord this over you for who knows how long?'
 					act 'Agree': gt 'anushkamaksim','maksim_blackmail'
 					gs 'willpower', 'action', 'resist', 'medium'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -832,10 +830,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushmar':
 							gs 'stat'
 							minut += 1
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksim.jpg"></center>'
-							'"Fuck off you little shit." You tell him and smirk a bit as his surprised expression, he obviously expected you to agree.'
-							'Then he gets angry. "Fine bitch, I will just go show her."'
-							'You smirk to him. "Go right in, go in while your sister is having sex, I am sure they won''t mind and if you wait till they finish I am sure your sister won''t mind you was trying to blackmail one of her friends. Who do you think she will be more pissed at?"'
-							'He snears at you, pauses a moment then angerly walks away.'
+							'"Fuck off, you little shit!" you snarl and smirk at his surprised expression.'
+							'Anger washes over him. "Fine, bitch! I''ll just go show her."'
+							'You smirk at him. "Go ahead, go in there while your sister is having sex. I''m sure they won''t mind. If you wait until they''re finished, then I''m sure your sister won''t mind that you were trying to blackmail one of her friends. Who do you think she''ll be more pissed at?"'
+							'He sneers at you and pauses before angrily walking away.'
 							act 'Leave apartment': gt 'pav_complex','start'
 							act 'Wait for Marcus to leave': gt 'anushkaev2','wait_nushmar'
 						end
@@ -844,7 +842,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_nushmar':
 					end
 				else
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/spymar4.jpg"></center>'
-					'"Please I want more of your... big... black... cock... in my ass." You think she is playing up the accent while speaking English. He grabs hold of her and pulls her up onto her knees, giving him much better access to her ass. He starts fucking her again, but it takes a little prodding from her for him to start going deeper and faster. Once he is sure she is into it, he starts being less gentle about it and as the first hard orgasm hits her, he starts really fucking her.'
+					'"Please I want more of your... big... black... cock... in my ass." You think she''s playing up the accent while speaking English. He grabs hold of her and pulls her up onto her knees, giving him much better access to her ass. He starts fucking her again, but it takes a little prodding from her for him to start going deeper and faster. Once he is sure she is into it, he starts being less gentle about it and as the first hard orgasm hits her, he starts really fucking her.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Leave apartment': gt 'pav_complex','start'
@@ -885,9 +883,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wait_nushmar':
 	'"Um yeah, we did... I need to go... See you at school <<$pcs_nickname>>..." He quickly hurries past you and out of the apartment. You open Anushka''s door and walk in to see that she is only half dressed with some of his cum still on her face.'
 	*nl
 	'She glances over at you as you walk in and smiles. "Hey you."'
-	'You smile back at her and her casual response. "Hey you back. So... you and Marcus huh?"'
+	'You smile back at her and her casual response. "Hey you back. So... you and Marcus, huh?"'
 	'She arches her brow as she finishes getting dressed. "Me and Marcus what?"'
-	'You point to your side of your face, indicating the splatter of cum still on her face. It takes her a moment to realize before she looks in the mirror and cleans the rest of it off. "Oh... Shut up." she says, but you can tell by her tone she is more amused than bothered by it.'
+	'You point to your side of your face, indicating the splatter of cum still on her face. It takes her a moment to realize before she looks in the mirror and cleans the rest of it off. "Oh... Shut up." she says, but you can tell by her tone that she''s more amused than bothered by it.'
 	act 'Hang out in her room': gt 'anushapt','anushroom'
 	act 'Say nothing and join her on the bed': gt 'anushapt', 'bed'
 	act 'Talk about what just happened': gt 'anushkaev2', 'talk_about_marcus'
@@ -953,7 +951,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mar3some':
 		'Anushka laughs at Marcus''s reaction before turning towards you and calmly asking "Do you mind <<$pcs_nickname>>? We''re kind of busy here."'
 		*nl
 		'Your smile falters at her reaction. "It looked like you guys were having fun, so I thought I could join in..."'
-		'Anushka hesitates for a moment. "<<$pcs_nickname>> uh... No, I don''t think so." she says while shaking her head.'
+		'Anushka hesitates for a moment. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, uh... No, I don''t think so," she says while shaking her head.'
 		'You feel a bit rejected. "Oh... sorry... I didn''t mean to disturb you guys."'
 		'Marcus stands up while still trying to cover himself. "Uh, maybe I should go?" he says, but Anushka pushes him back down on the bed and replies "No, I don''t think so. I''m not done with you yet. Besides, <<$pcs_nickname>> was just leaving." she says while giving you a pointed look. Getting the hint, you walk to the door and walk out. Closing it behind you, you quickly leave the apartment.'
 		act 'Leave apartment': gt 'pav_complex','start'
@@ -996,7 +994,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'eat_nush_fucked':
 					act 'Climax':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/spy/join/mar/marnushs11.jpg"></center>'
-						'You crawl over and barely get your mouth open before his dick erupts with ropy streams of thick cum. Some of it lands on Anushka''s leg, but the majority of the cum ends up in your mouth or on your face as Marcus moans loudly. When he finally finishes with a few small spurts, he backs off and takes a seat at her desk. "My god, you guys were amazing!" he says in a loving tone, full of respect and admiration.'
+						'You crawl over and barely get your mouth open before his dick erupts with ropey streams of thick cum. Some of it lands on Anushka''s leg, but the majority of the cum ends up in your mouth or on your face as Marcus moans loudly. When he finally finishes with a few small spurts, he backs off and takes a seat at her desk. "My god, you guys were amazing!" he says in a loving tone, full of respect and admiration.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'group', 'lesbian'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'A146'
@@ -1057,7 +1055,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'talk_about_marcus':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/anushroom/nushbed.jpg"></center>'
 			if nushmarcus_selfie = 1:
 				'You''re curious about the selfie she took. "Why did you take that selfie, you know... with his cum on your face?"'
-				'She cocks her head slightly and then smiles. "How do you know I did that?"'
+				'She cocks her head slightly and smiles. "How do you know I did that?"'
 				'"When he opened the door to leave, I seen you with your phone in your hand taking a selfie."'
 				'She gives you a slightly suspecious look and you''re not sure if she believes you or not, but but she seemingly doesn''t care either way. "I often take selifes during or after sex as keep sakes. Why?"'
 				'You shake your head slightly. "I was just curious is all."'
@@ -1079,7 +1077,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'talk_about_marcus':
 				if nushmarcus_selfie = 1:
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/sex/nushmarselfie.jpg"></center>'
 					'You bite your lower lip, curious what the selfie she took looks like. "Can I see it? The selfie you took I mean."'
-					'She grins. "You''re such a pervert." she says in a teasing tone, but grabs her phone and pulls up the image before handing the phone over. You take it and look at the image of Anushka covered in cum with Marcus'' dick in front of her face. After a minute or so, you hand her her phone back.'
+					'She grins. "You''re such a pervert," she says in a teasing tone, but grabs her phone and pulls up the image before handing the phone over. You take it and look at the image of Anushka covered in cum with Marcus'' dick in front of her face. After a minute or so, you hand her her phone back.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 2
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -1134,11 +1132,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'disco_restroom':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom1.jpg"></center>'
 	if $pantyworntype = 'none':
-		'The two of you make your way to the other floors restroom where you are unlikely to be disturbed by anyone. Once inside she leads you over to the sinks and helps lift you up so you are sitting on the sink counter, she starts pushing up your skirt, until she exposes your pussy. She makes a tsking sound when she see''s your not wearing panties. "What a dirty girl you are <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'The two of you make your way to the restroom on the other floor where you''re unlikely to be disturbed. Once inside, she leads you over to the sinks and helps lift you up onto the counter. She starts pushing up your skirt until she exposes your pussy and tuts when she sees that you''re not wearing panties. "What a dirty girl you are <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 	else
-		'The two of you make your way to the other floors restroom where you are unlikely to be disturbed by anyone. Once inside she leads you over to the sinks and helps lift you up so you are sitting on the sink counter, she starts pushing up your skirt, until she exposes your panties, then she reaches up further to your hips and grabs your panties and pulls them down, sliding them down your legs and tosses them aside. "Those are just going to get in the way."'
+		'The two of you make your way to the restroom on the other floor where you''re unlikely to be disturbed. Once inside, she leads you over to the sinks and helps lift you up onto the counter. She starts pushing up your skirt until she exposes your panties, then reaches up further and grabs your panties and pulls them down, sliding them down your legs and tosses them aside. "Those are just going to get in the way."'
 	end
-	act 'Makeout':
+	act 'Make out':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom2.jpg"></center>'
 		'With your skirt pushed up to your waist, leaving you naked from the waist down, she pulls you forward until you slide off the counter and the two of you start kissing and making out.'
@@ -1147,58 +1145,58 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'disco_restroom':
 		act 'Surprise':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom3.jpg"></center>'
-			'With out warning she suddenly breaks the kiss and spins you around until you are facing the mirrors along the wall above the sink. She pushes you forward at the shoulders until she bends you over the counter, with your naked butt exposed and on display she slaps it, causing you to yelp in surprise more than anything. Which is followed by several more smacks as she spanks your butt cheeks until they are a nice reddish color.'
+			'Without warning, she suddenly breaks the kiss and spins you around until you''re facing the mirrors along the wall above the sink. She pushes you forward at the shoulders and bends you over the counter. She slaps your bare ass, causing you to yelp in surprise, which is followed by several more smacks as she spanks your ass until it''s red.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 1, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Get fingered':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom4.jpg"></center>'
-				'Once your butt cheeks are nice and red, she slides one hand between your thighs and starts to rub your clit, making you moan softly. As soon as your twat is wet enough she slides first one then two fingers inside of you and starts to finger bang you. "Oh you like this, don''t you, you dirty little slut."'
+				'She slides a hand between your thighs and starts rubbing your clit, making you moan softly. As soon as your pussy is wet enough, she slides two fingers inside you and starts finger banging you. "Oh you like this don''t you, you dirty little slut?!"'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 2, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Into the stall':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom5.jpg"></center>'
-					'Once she finishes fingering you until you are nice and wet, she grabs you by the hair and drags you into the large stall on the end, once inside she strips away part of her clothes and the rest of yours. She leans against the wall and spreads her legs, dragging you over by your hair. She pulls your face between her legs, you start to lick at her pussy which is already wet. After a couple of minutes she pulls your face away from her. "Where''s your strapon?" You point to your purse.'
+					'She suddenly grabs you by the hair and drags you into the stall on the end of the row. Once inside, she strips away some of her clothes and the rest of yours before leaning against the wall and spreading her legs. She drags you over by your hair and pulls your face between her legs. You start to lick her pussy, which is already wet. After a few minutes of this, she pulls your face away from her. "Where''s your strap-on?" she asks and you point to your purse.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 2, 'lesbian'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Wait':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 10
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom6.jpg"></center>'
-						'She opens your purse, pulling out the strapon harness, and putting it on. You sit on the toilet resting while she finishes securing the harness in place. Turning to you she looks down at you. "I''m going to fuck you so hard with this, your not going to walk right for a week." She says with a grin.'
+						'She opens your purse and pulls out the strap-on harness before putting it on. You sit on the toilet while she finishes securing the harness in place before turning and looking down at you. "I''m going to fuck you so hard, you''re not going to walk right for a week!"'
 						act 'Get fucked':
 							*clr & cla
 							gs 'boyStat', 'D<<strapnumber>>'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom7.jpg"></center>'
-							'Pulling you up she turns you around and bends you over. You feel the tip of the dildo sliding up and down against your slit, making you wetter and it wet in the process. Once both is plenty wet she slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo into you and starts fucking you slowly at first but the more the moan the faster she starts humping you.'
+							'Pulling you up, she turns you around and bends you over. You feel the tip of the dildo sliding up and down against your slit before she slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo into you. She starts fucking you slowly at first, but the more you moan the faster she starts fucking you.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 3, 'lesbian'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Get pounded':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom8.jpg"></center>'
-								'She starts really hammering away at your twat, the skin of her hips slapping against your butt checks with each stroke. She holds onto you with both hands so you can''t pull away as she pounds away at you, after a few more minutes she starts to slow, leaning forward she says. "I''m going to fuck your tight little ass next."'
+								'She starts really hammering away at your pussy, her hips loudly slapping against your ass with each thrust as she holds onto you with both hands so you can''t pull away as she pounds away at you. After a few minutes, she starts to slow down and leans forward. "I''m going to fuck your tight little ass next..."'
 								gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 3, 'lesbian'
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Take charge':
 									*clr & cla
 									minut += 10
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom9.jpg"></center>'
-									'You shake your head. "Not tonight, tonight I want to ride you." You say as you pull away from her, you feel the dildo slide out of you. You turn around, grabbing her and manhandling her to sit on the toilet. Once sitting you straddle her and slowly impale yourself on the didlo again. You ride her like this until your legs start to get tired, once she slow down enough. She lifts you off her, getting up she unbuckles the harness, letting it fall to the ground. Then leaning against the wall she spreads her legs and says in a husky turned on voice. "Finish me off."'
+									'You shake your head. "Not tonight, tonight I want to ride you." You pull away from her and feel the dildo slide out of you. You turn around and manhandle her to sit on the toilet before you straddle her and slowly impale yourself onto the didlo again. You ride her like this until your legs start to get tired and she lifts you off her and unbuckles the harness, letting it fall to the ground before leaning against the wall and spreading her legs. "Finish me off."'
 									gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 5, 'lesbian'
 									gs 'stat'
 									act 'Eat her out again':
 										*clr & cla
 										minut += 3
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom13.jpg"></center>'
-										'You get down on your knees and start eating her out again, she moans loudly and is already soaking wet. It only takes a few minutes until she starts shaking moaning loudly and has a orgasm, drenching your face in her juices. For a couple of minutes afterwards you both just rest panting catching your breath and recovering.'
+										'You get down on your knees and start eating her out again. She''s already soaking wet and it only takes a few minutes until she starts shaking and moaning loudly as she orgasms, drenching your face in her juices. For the next few minutes, you both just rest, panting and catching your breath as you recover.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 3, 'lesbian'
 										gs 'stat'
 										act 'Afterglow':
 											*clr & cla
 											minut += 10
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom14.jpg"></center>'
-											'After the short rest she grabs you by the face and kisses you, with a long and passionate kiss. Once she breaks the kiss she says. "I had fun, we should do this again some time." With that she starts getting dressed again after cleaning herself up, you follow suit and both do the same thing. She finishes a bit before you and heads out. "I''m heading back to the disco to see what''s going on, see you later." Then she walks out, you leave a couple of minutes later.'
+											'Once she recovers, she grabs you by the face and gives you a long, passionate kiss for a few seconds before breaking it. "I had fun. We should do this again some time." With that, she starts getting dressed after cleaning herself up. You follow suit as she heads out. "I''m heading back to the disco to see what''s going on. See you later." She walks out and you wait for a few minutes before leaving as well.'
 											gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 1, 'lesbian'
 											gs 'arousal', 'end'
 											gs 'stat'
@@ -1207,36 +1205,36 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'disco_restroom':
 										end
 									end
 								end
-								act 'Let her fuck your butt':
+								act 'Let her fuck your ass':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom10.jpg"></center>'
-									'She pulls the dildo out of your pussy, then uses her finger, getting them nice and wet then rubbing them against your asshole, once it is nice and lubed from your own naturally lubrication. You feel the tip of the dildo pressed against your butthole and the pressure build into the tip of it pops in, you hiss slightly and moan a bit in a mixture of pleasure and pain. She starts slowly and not to deep fucking your ass with the strapon.'
+									'She pulls the dildo out of your pussy and lubricates her fingers with your juices before rubbing them against your asshole. You then feel the tip of the dildo press against your asshole and the pressure build until the tip pops in. You hiss and in a mix of pleasure and pain as she starts slowly fucking your ass.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 3, 'lesbian'
 									gs 'stat'
 									act 'Balls deep':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom11.jpg"></center>'
-										'As you moan louder and louder she starts fucking you slightly harder and deeper, until she finally works the dildo balls deep into your ass, you can hear the slapping of flesh echoing in the restroom as her hips slap against your butt cheeks with each thrust. Reaching between your legs you start rubbing your clit, to increase the pleasure you are feeling.'
+										'As you moan louder, she starts fucking you slightly harder and deeper until she finally works the dildo balls deep into your ass. You can hear the slapping of flesh echoing in the room as her hips slap against your ass with each thrust. Reaching between your legs, you start rubbing your clit to increase the pleasure.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 3, 'lesbian'
 										gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', -3, 'lesbian'
 										gs 'stat'
 										act 'Anal pounding':
 											*clr & cla
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom12.jpg"></center>'
-											'She grabs ahold of your hair and starts really hammering your ass hard and fast, she keeps up the jackhammer speed for several minutes before she starts to breath heavy and slow down. Finally she stops and pulls the dildo out of your ass leaving, backing away she unbuckles the harness, letting it fall to the ground. Then leaning against the wall she spreads her legs and says in a husky turned on voice. "Finish me off."'
+											'She grabs hold of your hair and starts really hammering your ass hard and fast. She keeps up the jackhammer speed for several minutes before she starts to breathing heavily and slows down until she stops and pulls the dildo out of your ass. Backing away, she unbuckles the harness and lets it fall to the ground before leaning against the wall and spreading her legs. "Finish me off."'
 											gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 3, 'lesbian'
 											gs 'stat'
 											act 'Eat her out again':
 												*clr & cla
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom13.jpg"></center>'
-												'You get down on your knees and start eating her out again, she moans loudly and is already soaking wet. It only takes a few minutes until she starts shaking moaning loudly and has a orgasm, drenching your face in her juices. For a couple of minutes afterwards you both just rest panting catching your breath and recovering.'
+												'You get down on your knees and start eating her out again. She''s already soaking wet and it only takes a few minutes until she starts shaking and moaning loudly as she orgasms, drenching your face in her juices. For the next few minutes, you both just rest, panting and catching your breath as you recover.'
 												gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 3, 'lesbian'
 												gs 'stat'
 												act 'Afterglow':
 													*clr & cla
 													minut += 10
 													'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/disco_restroom14.jpg"></center>'
-													'After the short rest she grabs you by the face and kisses you, with a long and passionate kiss. Once she breaks the kiss she says. "I had fun, we should do this again some time." With that she starts getting dressed again after cleaning herself up, you follow suit and both do the same thing. She finishes a bit before you and heads out. "I''m heading back to the disco to see what''s going on, see you later." Then she walks out, you leave a couple of minutes later.'
+													'Once she recovers, she grabs you by the face and gives you a long, passionate kiss for a few seconds before breaking it. "I had fun. We should do this again some time." With that, she starts getting dressed after cleaning herself up. You follow suit as she heads out. "I''m heading back to the disco to see what''s going on. See you later." She walks out and you wait for a few minutes before leaving as well.'
 													gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 1, 'lesbian'
 													gs 'arousal', 'end'
 													gs 'stat'
@@ -1261,24 +1259,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'disco_emptyroom':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You find a door unlocked and you tell her to go inside. "Go on in, I will join you in a minute." You quickly walk to the womens restroom, go into one of the stalls and put the strapon harness on under your skirt, loosely, so the dildo hangs between your legs, unnoticed under your skirt. With it in place you head back to the room where you left Anushka. When you enter it, you look around, not sure what the room is for, it looks pretty nice with a large table in the middle. Maybe used for meetings or something? Either way you go inside and close the door behind you, now locking it. She is standing over near a corner smoking a joint, as you walk over and lean against the wall in the corner, she looks you over with a hungry lust filled look in her eye, she offers you a hit off the joint.'
-	act 'Take a hit first':
+	'You find an unlocked door unlocked and tell her to go inside. "Head in, I''ll join you in a minute." You quickly walk to the womens restroom, enter one of the stalls and slide the strap-on harness on under your skirt so the dildo hangs between your legs. The strap-on in place, you head back to the room where you left Anushka. When you enter, you look around, unsure what the purpose of the room is before locking the door. Anushka is standing in a corner smoking a joint as you walk over and lean against the wall. She looks you over with a hungry lust filled look in her eye and offers you a hit of the joint.'
+	act 'Take a hit':
 		cla
 		joint += 1
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'drugs', 'joint'
 		*nl
-		'You take the offered joint from her and take a hit off it before handing it back. You spend several minutes passing the joint back and forth between the two of you taking hits as you do. Once the joint is pretty much gone and you are feeling nice and high, it is time to show her what you are already wearing.'
-		act 'Show her the strapon instead':
+		'You take the offered joint from her and take a hit of it before handing it back. You spend several minutes passing the joint back and forth until it''s gone. Feeling nice and high, it''s time to show her what you''re already wearing.'
+		act 'Show her the strapon':
 			*clr & cla
 			if strapnumber >= 5:
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big144.jpg"></center>'
-				'You grab the straps that loosely holds the harness in place, that lets the dildo dangle between your legs and pull them tight. The dildo rises up like you are getting a hard on, lifting your skirt as it does. Pulling the skirt off it, you expose it to her to see her reaction. At first she looks a bit amazed and really turned on but then when you reveal the full size of it she starts shaking her head no. "No way, that thing wouldn''t fit in my ass. I thought you had... you know a human sized didlo, not some horse cock." You try to talk her into it but she just flat refuses to let you stick something that big up her ass. After a couple of minutes you she says she is going back to the disco, leaving you alone with your horse cock dildo.'
-				act 'Back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
+				'You grab the straps that loosely holds the harness in place and pull them tight. The dildo rises up like you''re getting a hard on, lifting your skirt as it does. Pulling your skirt up, you expose it to her to see her reaction. At first she looks turned on, but when you reveal the full size of it, she starts shaking her head. "No way, that thing wouldn''t fit in my ass. I thought you had... you know, a human sized didlo, not some horse cock." You try to talk her into it, but she flat out refuses to let you stick something that big up her ass.' 
+				'After a few minutes, she tells you she''s going back to the disco, leaving you alone with your horse cock dildo.'
+				act 'Go back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
 				act 'Leave': gt 'pav_commcenter'
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked2.jpg"></center>'
-				'You grab the straps that loosely holds the harness in place, that lets the dildo dangle between your legs and pull them tight. The dildo rises up like you are getting a hard on, lifting your skirt as it does. Pulling the skirt off it, you expose it to her to see her reaction. At first she looks a bit amazed and really turned on, as you reveal the full size of it she starts kissing you. "Am I making you hard baby?" She asks you in a husky aroused tone of voice as she reaches over and starts stroking your fake cock.'
+				'You grab the straps that loosely holds the harness in place and pull them tight. The dildo rises up like you''re getting a hard on, lifting your skirt as it does. Pulling your skirt up, you expose it to her to see her reaction. At first she looks turned on, but when you reveal the full size of it, she starts kissing you. "Am I making you hard, baby?" she asks in an aroused tone as she reaches over and starts stroking your fake cock.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 1, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Make her suck your dick': gt 'anushkaev2', 'disco_emptyroom_suck_strapon'
@@ -1289,12 +1288,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'disco_emptyroom':
 		*clr & cla
 		if strapnumber >= 5:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big144.jpg"></center>'
-			'You grab the straps that loosely holds the harness in place, that lets the dildo dangle between your legs and pull them tight. The dildo rises up like you are getting a hard on, lifting your skirt as it does. Pulling the skirt off it, you expose it to her to see her reaction. At first she looks a bit amazed and really turned on but then when you reveal the full size of it she starts shaking her head no. "No way, that thing wouldn''t fit in my ass. I thought you had... you know a human sized didlo, not some horse cock." You try to talk her into it but she just flat refuses to let you stick something that big up her ass. After a couple of minutes you she says she is going back to the disco, leaving you alone with your horse cock dildo.'
-			act 'Back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
+			'You grab the straps that loosely holds the harness in place and pull them tight. The dildo rises up like you''re getting a hard on, lifting your skirt as it does. Pulling your skirt up, you expose it to her to see her reaction. At first she looks turned on, but when you reveal the full size of it, she starts shaking her head. "No way, that thing wouldn''t fit in my ass. I thought you had... you know, a human sized didlo, not some horse cock." You try to talk her into it, but she flat out refuses to let you stick something that big up her ass.' 
+			'After a few minutes, she tells you she''s going back to the disco, leaving you alone with your horse cock dildo.'
+			act 'Go back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'pav_commcenter'
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You grab the straps that loosely holds the harness in place, that lets the dildo dangle between your legs and pull them tight. The dildo rises up like you are getting a hard on, lifting your skirt as it does. Pulling the skirt off it, you expose it to her to see her reaction. At first she looks a bit amazed and really turned on, as you reveal the full size of it she starts kissing you. "Am I making you hard baby?" She asks you in a husky aroused tone of voice as she reaches over and starts stroking your fake cock.'
+			'You grab the straps that loosely holds the harness in place and pull them tight. The dildo rises up like you''re getting a hard on, lifting your skirt as it does. Pulling your skirt up, you expose it to her to see her reaction. At first she looks turned on, but when you reveal the full size of it, she starts kissing you. "Am I making you hard, baby?" she asks in an aroused tone as she reaches over and starts stroking your fake cock.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 1, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Make her suck your dick': gt 'anushkaev2', 'disco_emptyroom_suck_strapon'
@@ -1307,25 +1307,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'disco_emptyroom_suck_strapon':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked4.jpg"></center>'
-	'You push her down until she is squatting on the floor, you rub the tip of the dildo against her lips. She opens her mouth and starts to suck on your fake cock while stroking it with one hand. She does a nice little combo with her mouth and hand, you image the boys love it.'
+	'You push her down until she''s squatting on the floor and rub the tip of the dildo against her lips. She opens her mouth and starts to suck on your fake cock while stroking it with one hand.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay_give', 2, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Watch her suck you off':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked3.jpg"></center>'
-		'She starts really getting into it, getting the dildo nice and wet with her slobber as she bobs her head on it and strokes it with one hand. The boy must love her blow job skills, at least they look impressive to you as you watch her. While it is fun to watch you are getting bored with it, so you grab her and pull her back up standing. You twirl her with your hands, till she is facing away from you. You push her forward until she is bent over, sliding your hands down her sides to her hips, you reach up under her skirt and pull her panties midway down her thighs.'
+		'She starts really getting into it, getting the dildo wet with her slobber as she bobs her head up and down on it while stroking it with one hand. The boys must love her blowjob skills. While it''s fun to watch, you''re getting bored, so you grab her and pull her back up before twirling her around with your hands. You push her forward until she''s bent over and slide your hands down her sides to her hips before reaching up under her skirt and pulling her panties midway down her thighs.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay_give', 2, 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Eat her out':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked5.jpg"></center>'
-			'You squat down behind her and start licking her already wet pussy, she moans loudly and presses herself back against your face. Once she is soaking wet you start lapping up to her butt hole getting it nice and wet with her pussy juices and your slobber. When you stop licking her and stand up behind her she says. "Make sure to use plenty of lube."'
+			'You squat down behind her and start licking her already wet pussy. She moans loudly and presses herself back against your face as you start lapping at her asshole, getting it wet with her pussy juices and your slobber. After a few minutes, you stop licking her and stand up behind her. "Make sure to use plenty of lube."'
 			if lubri > 0:
-				'You open your purse and pull out the little bottle of lube you carry around and start lubing up your dildo until it is nice and slick, then you add a little to her butt.'
+				'You open your purse, pull out the little bottle of lube you carry around and start lubing up your dildo until it''s nice and slick before adding some to her asshole.'
 			else
-				'Not having any lube on your, you tell her. "Sorry I don''t have any.'
-				'She shakes her head slightly and says. "There is a small bottle in my purse." You open her purse and pull out the little bottle of lube she apparently carries around and start lubing up your dildo until it is nice and slick, then you add a little to her butt.'
+				'"Sorry, but I don''t have any." you reply.'
+				'She shakes her head slightly. "There''s a bottle in my purse." You open her purse and pull out the little bottle of lube she apparently carries around and start lubing up your dildo until it''s nice and slick before adding some to her asshole.'
 			end
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 2, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'arousal', 'rimming_give', 2, 'lesbian'
@@ -1333,36 +1333,37 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'disco_emptyroom_suck_strapon':
 			act 'Stick your cock in her ass':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked6.jpg"></center>'
-				'With your fake cock lubed up and her asshole lubed up, you start rubbing the tip of it against her butthole. You push against her until the tip pops into her ass, causing her to gasp slightly and moan loudly. You start slow letting her get use to it, she moans softly enjoying it.'
+				'With your fake cock and her ass lubed up, you start rubbing the tip of it against her asshole. You push against her until the tip pops into her ass, causing her to gasp slightly and moan loudly. You start slowly letting her get used to it and she moans softly.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 2, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
-				act 'Fuck her butt':
+				act 'Fuck her ass':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'boyStat', 'D<<strapnumber>>'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked7.jpg"></center>'
-					'Now that she seems ready, you grab her by the hips and shove the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo balls deep into her ass, causing her to moan even louder. You start fucking her butt in earnest and she seems to be loving every moment of it, if her loud moans and body language is any indication. "Look at you, such a slut, my cock slide balls deep in you and all you do is moan like a whore." You tell her which causes her to glance back at you with a aroused look, you can tell she is loving what you are doing.'
+					'When she seems ready, you grab her by the hips and shove the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo balls deep into her ass, causing her to moan even louder. You start fucking her ass in earnest and she seems to be loving every moment of it if her loud moans and body language is any indication. "Look at you being such a slut! My cock slides balls deep into you and all you do is moan like a whore!" you tell her, which causes her to glance back at you with an aroused smile. You can tell she''s loving what you''re doing.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 2, 'lesbian'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Push her down on all fours':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked8.jpg"></center>'
-						'You push her panties the rest of the way to the floor and help her step out of them, then you push her down and go down with her, keeping the dildo inside of her the whole way until she is down on all fours. While kneeling on one knee you smack her ass as you start fucking her a bit harder. You pull near out of her and shove the shaft most of the way back inside of her butt, taking long strokes each time.'
+						'You push her panties the rest of the way down her legs and help her step out of them before pushing her down on all fours. You go down with her, keeping the dildo inside her the whole way. While kneeling on one knee, you smack her ass as you start fucking her a bit harder and pull nearly all the way out of her before shoving the shaft back inside her ass, taking long thrusts each time.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 2, 'lesbian'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Go balls deep':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked9.jpg"></center>'
-							'She starts moaning louder and louder you start pulling almost all the way out of her and now slamming the fake cock back into her balls deep, causing her to cry out in pleasure. "That''s right, cum for me you dirty little anal slut." You tell her, which seems to do the trick as less than a minute latter she starts shaking and cumming hard, you have to use your hands to keep her up right as you fuck her through her orgasm. Once it passes she starts to get up, causing the dildo to slide out of her gapping butt.'
+							'She starts moaning louder and louder as you slam the fake cock into her balls deep, causing her to cry out in pleasure. "That''s right, cum for me you dirty little anal slut!" you tell her, which seems to do the trick as less than a minute latter she starts shaking and cumming hard. You have to use your hands to keep her steady as you fuck her through her orgasm. Once it passes, she starts to get up, causing the dildo to slide out of her gaping ass.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 2, 'lesbian'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Finish':
 								*clr & cla
 								minut += 10
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked12.jpg"></center>'
-								'Now that she has cum, pulling your dildo out of her, you go to stand up and slip backwards landing on your butt. You both giggle at that, she stands up to help pull you up. She cleans herself up, while you clean up your dildo and put it away. By the time you finish she has her panties on again and her clothes back in place. She gives you a quick kiss, "I had a blast, but I''m going to go back to the disco see you later." With that she leaves and heads back to the disco, you could go back and see what might still be going or just head home.'
+								'Now that she has came, you''re about to stand up, but slip backwards and land on your ass. You both giggle as she stands up to help pull you up. She cleans herself up while you clean up your dildo and put it away. By the time you finish, she has her clothes back in place and gives you a quick kiss. "I had a blast, but I''m going to go back to the disco now. See you later." With that, she leaves and heads back to the disco.'
+								'You could go back and see what might still be going or just head home.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
-								act 'Back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
+								act 'Go back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
 								act 'Leave': gt 'pav_commcenter'
 							end
 							act 'Assert dominance':
@@ -1370,30 +1371,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'disco_emptyroom_suck_strapon':
 								pcs_stam -= 5
 								gs 'sweat', 'add', 3
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked10.jpg"></center>'
-								'Before she can fully stand you grab her and pull her back down, now just on one knee. She glances back at you with a puzzled look, but you push her forward again bending her over. "I didn''t I was done with you slut." You tell her as you roughly shove your fake cock back in her ass, causing her to gasp and moan. You hold onto her hips with one hand so she can''t pull away and start fucking her ass again.'
+								'Before she can stand up, you grab her and pull her back down on one knee. She glances back at you with a puzzled stare, but you push her forward and bend her over. "I didn''t I was done with you, slut!" you tell her as you roughly shove your fake cock back in her ass, causing her to gasp and moan. You hold onto her hips with one hand so she can''t pull away and start fucking her ass again.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 3, 'lesbian'
 								gs 'stat'
-								act 'Pound her butt':
+								act 'Pound her ass':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked11.jpg"></center>'
-									'She glances back at you and bites her lower lip, you can tell she is starting to get a little sore but you don''t care. You start hammering her butt as hard and fast as you can. "Tell me who''s ass this is." You tell her.'
-									'"OH... it''s yours..." she cries out, you can tell she is turned on by this little play. Despite all her attitude the girl just likes being dominated sometimes.'
-									*nl
-									'"That''s right and I can fuck it when ever and for as long as I want, isn''t that right you dirty fucking slut." You tell her as you keep pounding her as hard and fast as you can, you can feel sweat running down your back as you start to feel tired.'
-									'"OH... fuck!... yes..." She seems to be caught in the mixture of pleasure and pain, she seems to be getting close again. So you pull out of her then shove it back in with out warning balls deep. "Ow.. fuck!"'
-									'Then you pull out and stop, slapping her ass with your hand. "That''s right and I get to decided if you enjoy it or not."'
+									'She glances back at you and bites her lower lip. You can tell she''s starting to get a little sore, but you don''t care. You start hammering her ass as hard and fast as you can. "Tell me whose ass this is!"'
+									'"OH... It''s yours!" she cries out. Despite her attitude, you can tell she likes being dominated.'
+									'"That''s right! And I can fuck it whenever and for as long as I want! Isn''t that right, you dirty fucking slut?!" you tell her as you keep pounding her as hard and fast as you can. You can feel sweat running down your back as you grow tired.'
+									'"OH... Fuck!... Yes..." She seems to be caught in a mix of pleasure and pain and seems to be getting close again, so you pull out of her and shove it back in with balls deep without warning. "Ow... Fuck!"'
+									'You pull out and stop, slapping her ass with your hand. "That''s right and I get to decide if you enjoy it or not."'
 									gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 3, 'lesbian'
 									gs 'stat'
 									act 'Finish':
 										*clr & cla
 										minut += 10
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/sex/nush_getfucked12.jpg"></center>'
-										'Now that have established your dominance, you go to stand up and slip backwards landing on your butt. You both giggle at that, she stands up to help pull you up. She cleans herself up, while you clean up your dildo and put it away. By the time you finish she has her panties on again and her clothes back in place. "Fuck my ass hurts now, bitch!"'
-										'You laugh and give her a kiss, "We both know you loved it, you are such a anal slut."'
-										'She laughs and shakes her head a little. "You''re a fucking bitch you know that, but you''re my bitch." She says as she gives you a nice long passionate kiss. "I''m going to go back to the disco see you later." With that she leaves and heads back to the disco, you could go back and see what might still be going or just head home.'
+										'Now that you have established your dominance, you go to stand up, but slip backwards and land on your ass. You both giggle as she stands up to help pull you up. She cleans herself up while you clean up your dildo and put it away. By the time you finish, she has her clothes back in place. "Fuck, my ass hurts now. Bitch!"'
+										'You laugh and give her a kiss. "We both know you loved it! You''re such an anal slut."'
+										'She laughs and shakes her head a little. "You''re a fucking bitch, you know that? But you''re my bitch," she says before giving you a long passionate kiss. "I''m going back to the disco now. See you later." With that, she leaves and heads back to the disco. You could go back and see what might still be going or just head home.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
 										gs 'stat'
-										act 'Back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
+										act 'Go back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
 										act 'Leave': gt 'pav_commcenter'
 									end
 								end

locations/anushkamaksim.qsrc

@@ -6,17 +6,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maksim_blackmail':
 	AnushkaLoc = 2
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksim.jpg"></center>'
-	'You can''t believe you are about to be blackmailed by a boy not old enough to even grow facial hair yet. You sigh resigned to your fate. "Fine what do you want?"'
-	'He grins at you giving in. He looks you over like he is giving it some serious thought. "For now just show me your tits." He says.'
+	'You can''t believe you''re about to be blackmailed by a boy not old enough to even grow facial hair yet. You sigh, resigned to your fate. "Fine. What do you want?"'
+	'He grins at you and looks you over as if he''s giving it some serious thought. "For now, just show me your tits."'
 	act 'Show him your tits':
 		*clr & cla
 		maksim_blackmail = 1
 		gs 'fame', 'pav', 'sex', 1
 		inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/hallflashtits.jpg"></center>'
-		'You sigh, you should have expected this. You pull your clothes aside and show him your bare breasts. His grin manages to get even wider and he just stares at your tits, a couple of minutes passes and you are about to say something when he reaches out with one hand. You pull your shirt down quickly.'
-		'"You said show you."'
-		'"Fine," he sneers for a moment before then he smiling again. "Come with me."'
+		'You sigh as you pull your clothes aside and show him your bare breasts. His grin widens as he stares at you. A few minutes pass and you''re about to say something when he reaches out with his hand.' 
+		'You quickly pull your shirt back down. "You said show you."'
+		'"Fine," he sneers before smiling again. "Come with me."'
 		gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 5, 'humiliation', 'sub'
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -25,34 +25,32 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maksim_blackmail':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/maksim/downstairs.jpg"></center>'
-			'You follow him, he leads you down the stairs and outside to the local playground, once there he walks over to a few other boys about his age and finally stops. A couple of the other boys check you out and one asks him. "Who''s that?"'
-			'He has his back to your as he responds. You can only image the smug look on his face as he says. "She does things for me."'
+			'You follow him as he leads you down the stairs and outside to the playground. Once there, he walks over to a few boys around his age and stops. The boys check you out. "Who''s that?" one of them asks.'
+			'He has his back to your as he responds. You can only imagine the smug look on his face. "She does things for me."'
 			'One of the boys snorts a laugh. "Sure she does."'
-			'Then he turns towards you and saying, "Go buy me a pack of smokes."'
+			'He turns towards you. "Go buy me a pack of smokes."'
 			'"What?!"'
-			'"I said go buy me a pack of cigarettes." He gives you a stern look but it just shows how young he is, not intimidating at all.'
-			'You just sigh, this is going to be a pain. You are going to have to figure a way out of this, but for now you play along.'
-			'"Fine."'
-			'With that you turn and start walking to the nearest Kiosk.'
-			'As you walk off you hear the boys talking, all of them seem amazed and surprised you are doing what Maksim tells you to do, while he just acts all smug.'
+			'"I said go buy me a pack of cigarettes." He gives you a stern look, but it just shows how young he is and isn''t not intimidating at all.'
+			'You sigh. This is only going to get worse. You''ll have to figure a way out of this, but for now you can only play along. You turn and start walking to the nearby kiosk.'
+			'As you walk away, you hear the boys talking, surprised that you''re doing what Maksim says as he acts smug.'
 			if money >= 150:
-				act 'Go buy the pack':
+				act 'Buy him cigarettes':
 					*clr & cla
 					money -= 150
 					minut += 20
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/maksim/buycig.jpg"></center>'
-					'You walk to the kiosk and get in line, you wait your turn slowly wondering just how you found yourself in this situation. When you finally get up to the window you buy a pack of cigarettes, pay for them and then start walking back.'
+					'You walk to the kiosk and get in line. You wait your turn, wondering how you found yourself in this situation. When you finally get up to the window, you buy a pack of cigarettes, pay for them and start walking back.'
 
 					act 'Walk back':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 5
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/maksim/smoking.jpg"></center>'
-						'As you get back you see the other boys all eying you, you can only imagine what Maksim has been telling them. You walk up to them and hand him the pack of cigarettes. "Here you go."'
-						'They all start muttering, they seem surprised you really did it. One of them even says. "I can''t believe, she really did it."'
+						'When you get back, you see the other boys all eying you. You can only imagine what Maksim has been telling them. You walk up to them and hand him the pack of cigarettes. "Here you go."'
+						'They all start muttering, seemingly surprised you actually did it.'
 						*nl
-						'Maksim takes the pack of cigarettes and passes them out to his friends and soon they all light up, a couple of them cough some. But it seems most of them have smoked before. After a few moments you are about to leave when one of them says to Maksim. "Having her buy you cigarettes is one thing..." You see the rest all nodding in agreement.'
-						'Maksim smirks to them. "Oh I see how it is, you have no faith in me, well ok then let me prove it." Then he turns towards you and says. "Show me your tits."'
-						'You give him a look of surprise but then you realize you really shouldn''t be, you don''t move for a moment but he gives you a look on what will happen if you don''t mixed with a look of pleading, he is obviously trying to impress his friends.'
+						'Maksim takes the pack of cigarettes and passes them out to his friends. They all light up and a few of them cough, but it seems most of them have smoked before. After a few minutes, you''re about to leave when one of them starts talking to Maksim. "Having her buy you cigarettes is one thing..." You see the rest all nodding in agreement.'
+						'Maksim smirks at them. "Oh I see how it is. You have no faith in me! Okay then, let me prove it." He turns towards you. "Show me your tits."'
+						'You give him a look of surprise and don''t move, but his stern glare tells you what will happen if you don''t.'
 
 						act 'Flash them your tits':
 							*clr & cla
@@ -60,14 +58,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maksim_blackmail':
 							gs 'fame', 'pav', 'sex', 2
 							inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/maksim/flashtits1.jpg"></center>'
-							'You sigh and then pull aside your clothes and flash them your tits.'
-							'"Holy shit! She really did it!" They all look surprised but Maksim who just looks smug.'
-							'"See? I told you guys." One of them starts to reach for your bare breasts. You start to move but Maksim stops him, grabbing his hand and pulling it away. "Hey no touching." You are surprised and a bit relieved he did that.'
-							'"Why not?" His friend asks.'
+							'You sigh as you pull aside your clothes and flash your breasts at them.'
+							'"Holy shit! She really did it!" They all look surprised, but Maksim just looks smug.'
+							'"See? I told you guys." One of them reaches for your bare breasts and you start to back away, but Maksim grabs his hand and pushes it away. "Hey, no touching!" You''re surprised and a little relieved.'
 							*nl
-							'"I''m still breaking her in and it will be when I say." He says and gives all his friends a look to show he is in charge here. "Now pay up," he says.'
-							'All his friends start handing over money, way more than the cigarettes would cost. He must have bet them you would show your tits. You sigh again and can''t believe you are being more or less pimped out by a boy that likely doesn''t even have hair on his balls yet. They all just stare at your tits for a couple of minutes more before Maksim says. "Ok you can go, we will talk later." He tries to make it sound like he was in charge and sexy at the same time, he failed but his friends seem to have bought it. You can''t help but roll your eyes. You rearrange your clothes back in place to cover everything and then you walk off.'
-							act 'Walk off': gt 'pav_complex','start'
+							'"Why not?" his friend asks.'
+							'"I''m still breaking her in and it will be when I say." He gives his friends a look to show that he''s in charge here. "Now pay up!"'
+							'The boys start handing over money, way more than the cigarettes would cost. He must have bet them that you would show your breasts. You sigh again and can''t believe you''re more or less being pimped out by a young boy. They all stare at your breasts for a few more minutes before Maksim looks at you. "Okay, you can go. We''ll talk later." He tries to make it sound like he''s in charge and sexy at the same time. He failed, but his friends seem to have bought it.' 
+							'You can''t help but roll your eyes as you rearrange your clothes back in place and walk away.'
+							act 'Leave': gt 'pav_complex','start'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -76,20 +75,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maksim_blackmail':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 20
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/maksim/buycig.jpg"></center>'
-					'You look down a moment, how sad is it you are this broke. Then you look back at him. "I don''t have enough money to buy them."'
-					'He gives you a look of disbelief. "Are you kidding me? How pathetic are you?" Then he snarls a bit and reaches into his pocket and pulls out several crumbled bills. "Here take it and go buy them."'
-					'You walk to the kiosk and get in line, you wait your turn slowly wondering just how you found yourself in this situation. When you finally get up to the window you buy a pack of cigarettes, pay for them and then start walking back.'
+					'You look down at the ground, then back up at him. "I don''t have money to buy them."'
+					'He looks at you in disbelief. "Are you kidding me? How pathetic are you?!" he snarls before reaching into his pocket and pulling out several crumbled bills. "Here, take this and go buy them."'
+					'You walk to the kiosk and get in line. You wait your turn, wondering how you found yourself in this situation. When you finally get up to the window, you buy a pack of cigarettes, pay for them and start walking back.'
 
 					act 'Walk back':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 5
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/maksim/smoking.jpg"></center>'
-						'As you get back you see the other boys all eying you, you can only imagine what Maksim has been telling them. You walk up to them and hand him the pack of cigarettes. "Here you go."'
-						'They all start muttering, they seem surprised you really did it. One of them even says. "I can''t believe, she really did it."'
+						'When you get back, you see the other boys all eying you. You can only imagine what Maksim has been telling them. You walk up to them and hand him the pack of cigarettes. "Here you go."'
+						'They all start muttering, seemingly surprised you actually did it.'
 						*nl
-						'Maksim takes the pack of cigarettes and passes them out to his friends and soon they all light up, a couple of them cough some. But it seems most of them have smoked before. After a few moments you are about to leave when one of them says to Maksim. "Having her buy you cigarettes is one thing..." You see the rest all nodding in agreement.'
-						'Maksim smirks to them. "Oh I see how it is, you have no faith in me, well ok then let me prove it." Then he turns towards you and says. "Show me your tits."'
-						'You give him a look of surprise but then you realize you really shouldn''t be, you don''t move for a moment but he gives you a look on what will happen if you don''t mixed with a look of pleading, he is obviously trying to impress his friends.'
+						'Maksim takes the pack of cigarettes and passes them out to his friends. They all light up and a few of them cough, but it seems most of them have smoked before. After a few minutes, you''re about to leave when one of them starts talking to Maksim. "Having her buy you cigarettes is one thing..." You see the rest all nodding in agreement.'
+						'Maksim smirks at them. "Oh I see how it is. You have no faith in me! Okay then, let me prove it." He turns towards you. "Show me your tits."'
+						'You give him a look of surprise and don''t move, but his stern glare tells you what will happen if you don''t.'
 
 						act 'Flash them your tits':
 							*clr & cla
@@ -97,15 +96,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maksim_blackmail':
 							gs 'fame', 'pav', 'sex', 2
 							inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/maksim/flashtits1.jpg"></center>'
-							'You sigh and then pull aside your clothes and flash them your tits.'
-							'"Holy shit! She really did it!" They all look surprised but Maksim who just looks smug.'
-							'"See? I told you guys." One of them starts to reach for your bare breasts. You start to move but Maksim stops him, grabbing his hand and pulling it away. "Hey no touching." You are surprised and a bit relieved he did that.'
-							'"Why not?" His friend asks.'
+							'You sigh as you pull aside your clothes and flash your breasts at them.'
+							'"Holy shit! She really did it!" They all look surprised, but Maksim just looks smug.'
+							'"See? I told you guys." One of them reaches for your bare breasts and you start to back away, but Maksim grabs his hand and pushes it away. "Hey, no touching!" You''re surprised and a little relieved.'
 							*nl
-							'"I''m still breaking her in and it will be when I say." He says and gives all his friends a look to show he is in charge here. "Now pay up," he says.'
-							'All his friends start handing over money, way more than the cigarettes would cost. He must have bet them you would show your tits. You sigh again and can''t believe you are being more or less pimped out by a boy that likely doesn''t even have hair on his balls yet. They all just stare at your tits for a couple of minutes more before Maksim says. "Ok you can go, we will talk later." He tries to make it sound like he was in charge and sexy at the same time, he failed but his friends seem to have bought it. You can''t help but roll your eyes. You rearrange your clothes back in place to cover everything and then you walk off.'
-
-							act 'Walk off': gt 'pav_complex','start'
+							'"Why not?" his friend asks.'
+							'"I''m still breaking her in and it will be when I say." He gives his friends a look to show that he''s in charge here. "Now pay up!"'
+							'The boys start handing over money, way more than the cigarettes would cost. He must have bet them that you would show your breasts. You sigh again and can''t believe you''re more or less being pimped out by a young boy. They all stare at your breasts for a few more minutes before Maksim looks at you. "Okay, you can go. We''ll talk later." He tries to make it sound like he''s in charge and sexy at the same time. He failed, but his friends seem to have bought it.' 
+							'You can''t help but roll your eyes as you rearrange your clothes back in place and walk away.'
+							act 'Leave': gt 'pav_complex','start'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -120,12 +119,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maksim_blackmail':
 			gs 'stat'
 			minut += 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksim.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Fuck off you little shit." He blinks in surprise at your words, eliciting a smirk from you. He obviously expected you to agree without question.'
-			'Then he gets angry. "Fine bitch, I will just go show her."'
-			'You smirk to him. "Go right in, go in while your sister is having sex, I am sure they won''t mind and if you wait till they finish. I am sure your sister won''t mind you was trying to blackmail one of her friends. Who do you think she will be more pissed at?"'
-			'He snears at you, pauses a moment then angrly walks away.'
+			'"Fuck off, you little shit!" you snarl and he blinks in surprise, eliciting a smirk from you. He obviously expected you to agree without question.'
+			'Anger washes over him. "Fine bitch! I''ll just go and show her!"'
+			'You smirk at him. "Go right head, I''m sure your sister won''t mind that you were trying to blackmail one of her friends. Who do you think she''ll be more pissed at?"'
+			'He sneers at you and pauses before angrily walking away.'
 
-			act 'Leave apartment': gt 'pav_complex','start'
+			act 'Leave': gt 'pav_complex','start'
 		end
 	else
 		act 'Tell him to fuck off (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'

locations/gschool_coolkid_chats.qsrc

@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 			end
 		else
 			'You bite your lower lip nervously and look down as you shake your head. "No, just give me a little more time and I will have it. Please?"'
-			'He sighs. "I like you <<$pcs_nickname>>, I do. But I can''t just let you slide. How about you pay me a little interest and you can pay me later?" The way he says it leaves no doubt exactly what he considers <i>interest</i> and it isn''t money.'
+			'He sighs. "I like you <<$pcs_nickname>>, I do, but I can''t just let you slide. How about you pay me a little interest and you can pay me later?" The way he says it leaves no doubt exactly what he considers <i>interest</i> and it isn''t money.'
 			gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 				act 'Refuse (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -40,14 +40,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dimka':
 			'Dimka looks into your eyes with a disinterested glare. "Whatever. After school, we''re going to my place. I''ll wait for you by the entrance."'
 		else
 			if (dimaRevenge = 6 and (dimaRevChoice = 3 or dimaRevChoice = 5 or dimaRevChoice = 6)) or (dimaRevenge = 7 and dimaRevChoice = 2) or (dimaRevenge = 8 and (dimaRevChoice = 1 or dimaRevChoice = 4)):
-				'As you walk up he glares at you. "What the fuck do you want slut?"'
+				'Dimka glares at as you approach. "What the fuck do you want, slut?"'
 				'You sigh. "Look, I know a lot has happened between us, but I thought we could leave it in the past and just be friends or something."'
-				'He stares at you blankly before shrugging. "Whatever." The two of you make small talk, but you get the feeling he is planning something.'
+				'He stares at you blankly before shrugging. "Whatever." The two of you make small talk, but you get the feeling he''s planning something.'
 			else
 				if fame['pav_slut'] > 200:
 					gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A1', 'dislike'
 					if npc_rel['A1'] >= 70:
-						'Dimka sees you approaching and gives you a blank stare, his gaze cold and unblinking. When you get close, he steps closer and hisses to you so the others can''t overhear him. "Don''t walk up to me at school like this! I have a reputation to protect." He then pushes you away and speaks loudly enough for everyone to hear him. "Get lost slut! No one wants you here." He continues to stare you down until you finally leave.'
+						'Dimka sees you approaching and gives you a blank stare, his gaze cold and unblinking. When you get close, he steps closer and hisses at you so the others can''t overhear him. "Don''t walk up to me at school like this! I have a reputation to protect." He then pushes you away and speaks loudly enough for everyone to hear him. "Get lost slut! No one wants you here." He continues to stare you down until you finally leave.'
 					else
 						'Dimka sees you approaching and gives you a blank stare, his gaze cold and unblinking. "Do you really think I would talk to a whore like you?" he dryly states. He continues to stare you down until you finally leave.'
 					end
@@ -279,7 +279,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor':
 				act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 			end
 		else
-			'Igor is hanging with Dimka, Stasya, and Bella when you approach. The others are quick to throw some insults your way while Igor mostly just silently nods in agreement. It seems the insults aren''t going to stop until you leave.'
+			'Igor is hanging with Dimka, Stasya and Bella when you approach. The others are quick to throw some insults your way while Igor mostly just silently nods in agreement. It seems the insults aren''t going to stop until you leave.'
 			act 'Help with homework':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big4.jpg"></center>'
@@ -293,18 +293,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor':
 				IgorQW['house_open'] = 1
 				'You know he doesn''t have many friends, so he''s more than happy that you want to hang out with him. Unlike most boys, Igor is really attentive and listens to everything you say, even taking an interest in the more "girly" topics.'
 				'"Oh, it''s not that weird," he says while blushing. "I have a sister, so I hear about these things all the time..."'
-				'The two of you spend some time chatting, when Dimka shows up, you see Igor''s face light up. "I need to get going, maybe we can hang out some time, if you want come by my house." he says while telling you where he lives, after which he gives you a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
+				'The two of you spend some time chatting before Dimka shows up and you see Igor''s face light up. "I need to get going. Maybe we can hang out some time, if you want come by my house?" he says while telling you where he lives, after which he gives you a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
 			elseif igorstrap >= 1:
 				act 'Tease him': gt 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'tease_igor'
 			else
 				'You know he doesn''t have many friends, so he''s more than happy that you want to hang out with him. Unlike most boys, Igor is really attentive and listens to everything you say, even taking an interest in the more "girly" topics.'
 				'"Oh, it''s not that weird," he says while blushing. "I have a sister, so I hear about these things all the time..."'
-				'The two of you spend some time chatting, when Dimka shows up, you see Igor''s face light up. "I need to get going, maybe we can talk some other time?" he asks with a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
+				'The two of you spend some time chatting before Dimka shows up and you see Igor''s face light up. "I need to get going. Maybe we can talk some other time?" he asks with a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
 				act 'Help with homework':
 					*clr & cla
 					igor_history = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big4.jpg"></center>'
-					'Before he can leave you stop him and ask if he can help with your homework. Igor''s face lights up. "Yeah, of course I''ll help you."'
+					'Before he can leave, you ask him if he can help with your homework and his face lights up. "Yeah, of course I''ll help you."'
 					act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 				end
 			end
@@ -332,7 +332,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor':
 				IgorQW['house_open'] = 1
 				'"Hey Igor, what are you doing?" you ask as you see him looking around for someone.'
 				'He shrugs dismissively. "Just waiting for Dimka."'
-				'The two of you spend some time chatting while he waits for Dimka. Eventually he shows up and Igor is ready to leave. "Maybe we can hang out some time, if you want come by my house." he says while telling you where he lives, after which he gives you a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
+				'The two of you spend some time chatting while he waits for Dimka. Eventually he shows up and Igor is ready to leave. "Maybe we can hang out some time, if you want come by my house?" he says while telling you where he lives, after which he gives you a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
 			elseif igorstrap >= 1:
 				act 'Tease him': gt 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'tease_igor'
 			else
@@ -371,7 +371,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor':
 				IgorQW['house_open'] = 1
 				'"Hey Igor, what are you doing?" you ask as you see him looking around for someone.'
 				'He shrugs dismissively. "Just waiting for Dimka."'
-				'The two of you spend some time chatting while he waits for Dimka. Eventually he shows up and Igor is ready to leave. "Maybe we can hang out some time, if you want come by my house." he says while telling you where he lives, after which he gives you a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
+				'The two of you spend some time chatting while he waits for Dimka. Eventually he shows up and Igor is ready to leave. "Maybe we can hang out some time, if you want come by my house?" he says while telling you where he lives, after which he gives you a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
 			elseif igorstrap >= 1:
 				act 'Tease him': gt 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'tease_igor'
 			else
@@ -410,7 +410,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor':
 				IgorQW['house_open'] = 1
 				'"Hey Igor, what are you doing?" you ask as you see him looking around for someone.'
 				'He shrugs dismissively. "Just waiting for Dimka."'
-				'The two of you spend some time chatting while he waits for Dimka. Eventually he shows up and Igor is ready to leave. "Maybe we can hang out some time, if you want come by my house." he says while telling you where he lives, after which he gives you a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
+				'The two of you spend some time chatting while he waits for Dimka. Eventually he shows up and Igor is ready to leave. "Maybe we can hang out some time, if you want come by my house?" he says while telling you where he lives, after which he gives you a small smile as he waves goodbye.'
 			elseif igorstrap >= 1:
 				act 'Tease him': gt 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'tease_igor'
 			else
@@ -507,12 +507,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor_peg':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/igor/sex/school/break4.jpg"></center>'
 				if strapnumber >= 5:
 					'You pull out the strap-on and start putting it on. "I''m going to fuck you like a bitch with my big hard cock."'
-					'His eyes get huge, but you can tell he is turned on by you taking charge like this, but he is also shaking his head no at the massive size of the dildo.'
-					'"Oh my God!! That thing is to big it would hurt to much, are you crazy?!" his eyes widen.'
-					'"What? You already let me fuck you with one before" you grin, looking at him.'
-					'"No!, that is way to big, a smaller one is ok, but not that thing." he says shaking his head no.'
-					'You sigh a bit and look down at the monster dildo, you know it is huge. But he won''t budge on trying it. "Ok I will get something smaller and we can do it next time." You tell him.'
-					'He nods. "Sounds good, I can''t wait." The two of you talk for a bit, before you decided it is time to leave and make sure to bring a smaller one with you next time.'
+					'His eyes grow wide. You can tell he''s turned on by you taking charge like this, but he''s also shaking his head at the massive size of the dildo.'
+					'"Oh my god, that thing is huge! It would hurt too much! Are you crazy?!"'
+					'"What? You already let me fuck you with one before." you grin while looking at him.'
+					'"No, that is way too big! A smaller one is okay, but not that thing!" he says while shaking his head.'
+					'You sigh and look down at the monster dildo, knowing he won''t budge on trying it. "Okay, I''ll get something smaller and we can do it next time."'
+					'He nods. "Sounds good, I can''t wait." The two of you talk for a bit before you decide it''s time to leave.'
 					act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 				else
 					'Having had enough, you want to give him his reward. You slide off the desk and grab your purse. You pull your strapon out and begin strapping it in place, Igor eagerly helping you. Once it''s in place, you smile at him. "Suck my dick, bitch." He eagerly starts sucking your strapon.'
@@ -523,13 +523,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor_peg':
 						gs 'boyStat', 'D<<strapnumber>>'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/igor/sex/school/break5.jpg"></center>'
 						if igorqw['schoolstrap'] = 1:
-							'Once he has the strapon nice and wet with his saliva, he stands up and bends over one of the desks without you even having to tell him. He seems very eager for you to fuck his ass. You step up behind him and rub the tip of your strapon against his little puckered asshole. You spit in the crack of his ass to add a little more lubrication before you press the head of the strapon against his asshole until it pops in. He moans in pleasure as your dick easily slides inside him.'
-							*nl
+							'Once he has the strap-on wet with his saliva, he stands up and bends over one of the desks without you even having to tell him. He seems very eager for you to fuck his ass. You step up behind him and rub the tip of your strap-on against his puckered asshole. You spit in the crack of his ass to add a little more lubrication before you press the head of the strap-on against his asshole until it pops in. He moans in pleasure as your dick easily slides inside him.'
 							'You slowly slide the full length of your <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo into his ass, causing him to moan even louder. Once you are balls deep, you start to slowly thrust the strapon into his ass. "Oh yes, fuck me with your cock!" he moans out. You steadily pick up speed with each thrust and before long, you''re holding onto his hips and pounding his ass. It doesn''t take long until he moans loudly and his whole body starts to shudder. You know he just shot his load without either of you even touching his dick.'
 						else
-							'Once he has the strapon nice and wet with his saliva, you smile down at him. "Bend over for me, my little slut."'
-							'He stands up and bends over one of the desks. You step up behind him and rub the tip of your strapon against his little puckered asshole. You spit in the crack of his ass to add a little more lubrication before you press the head of the strapon against his asshole until it pops in. He moans in a mixture of pain and pleasure as it does.'
-							*nl
+							'Once he has the strapon wet with his saliva, you smile down at him. "Bend over for me, my little slut."'
+							'He stands up and bends over one of the desks. You step up behind him and rub the tip of your strap-on against his puckered asshole. You spit in the crack of his ass to add a little more lubrication before you press the head of the strap-on against his asshole until it pops in. He moans in a mixture of pain and pleasure as it does.'
 							'You slowly slide the full length of your <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo into his ass. Once you are balls deep, you start to slowly thrust the strapon into his ass, steadily picking up speed until you''re holding onto his hips and pounding his ass. It doesn''t take long until he moans loudly and his whole body starts to shudder. You know he just shot his load without either of you even touching his dick.'
 						end
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo_give', 5, 'dom', 'rough'
@@ -539,11 +537,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor_peg':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big4.jpg"></center>'
 							if igorqw['schoolstrap'] = 1:
-								'Feeling better, and knowing he feels better, you give him a few last hard deep thrusts before pulling out of him. You take the harness off and clean up the dildo before putting them back in your purse and you both get dressed. Just as you both finish, the bell rings for your next class. You slap him on the ass, which makes him yelp a little, as you walk out of the class room with him. "Fuck you later Igor," you say to him with a wink.'
-								'He blushes and nods as he replies. "Talk to you later <<$pcs_nickname>>." You both hurry to your next class.'
+								'Feeling better, and knowing he feels better, you give him a few last hard deep thrusts before pulling out of him. You take the harness off and clean up the dildo before putting them back in your purse and you both get dressed. Just as you both finish, the bell rings for your next class. You slap him on the ass, which makes him yelp a little as you walk out of the classroom with him. "Fuck you later Igor," you say to him with a wink.'
+								'He blushes and nods as he replies. "Talk to you later <<$pcs_nickname>>." You then both hurry to your next class.'
 							else
-								'Feeling better, and knowing he feels better, you give him a few last hard deep thrusts before pulling out of him. You take the harness off and clean up the dildo before putting them back in your purse and you both get dressed. Just as you both finish, the bell rings for your next class. You slap him on the ass, which makes him yelp a little, as you walk out of the class room with him. "Talk to you later Igor," you say to him with a wink.'
-								'He blushes and nods as he replies. "Talk to you later <<$pcs_nickname>>." You both hurry to your next class.'
+								'Feeling better, and knowing he feels better, you give him a few last hard deep thrusts before pulling out of him. You take the harness off and clean up the dildo before putting them back in your purse and you both get dressed. Just as you both finish, the bell rings for your next class. You slap him on the ass, which makes him yelp a little as you walk out of the classroom with him. "Talk to you later Igor," you say to him with a wink.'
+								'He blushes and nods as he replies. "Talk to you later <<$pcs_nickname>>." You then both hurry to your next class.'
 							end
 							igorqw['schoolstrap'] = 1
 							act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -562,12 +560,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja':
 	gs 'stat'
 	if rand(1,2) = 1 and katjaQW['school_sex'] = 1 and katjaQW['horny'] >= 40:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/katja/tanga_kiss.jpg"></center>'
-		'Katja slowly leans in towards you, almost closing her eyes and slowly opening her mouth. Unable to resist, you lean in and meet her with a kiss.'
+		'Katja slowly leans in towards you, almost closing her eyes as she slowly opening her mouth. Unable to resist, you lean in and meet her with a kiss.'
 		gs 'katjaEvDin', 'kiss_events'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big14.jpg"></center>'
 		if npc_sex['A14'] > 0 and $pantyworntype = 'none' and PCloSkirt > 1 and katjaQW['no_panties_day'] ! daystart:
-			act 'Show her you are not wearing panties.': gt 'Katja_tanga', 'school'
+			act 'Show her you''re not wearing panties.': gt 'Katja_tanga', 'school'
 		end
 		if katjaQW['QWstage'] > 2:
 			if katjaQW['Horny'] < 20:
@@ -671,7 +669,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'katja':
 				elseif grupTipe = 2:
 					if npc_rel['A14'] >= 50:
 						'You approach Katja and have a lively conversation where you exchange funny stories about Vanya. "And that''s how my sister fell in love with the biggest clown in school!" she laughs with a snort.'
-									'"And I wouldn''t change him for the world!" Vicky adds with a smile.'
+						'"And I wouldn''t change him for the world!" Vicky adds with a smile.'
 					elseif npc_rel['A14'] <= 20:
 						'Katja looks around nervously when she sees you approaching. "Why do you want to talk to me? I''m not sporty like you or my sister or Albina. Could you go and....speak with someone else please?"'
 					else
@@ -761,88 +759,86 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bella':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big22.jpg"></center>'
 	if fame['pav_slut'] > 200:
 		if npc_rel['A22'] >= 80:
-			'"Well are you going to do something with your life or are you planning to be toy for boys for the rest of your life?" Bella lectures.'
-			'"Gosh you lecture like my mom" you reply unimpressed.'
-			'"You need Jesus, literally." Bella rolls her eyes and shakes her head before walking off.'                 
+			'"Are you going to do something with your life or are you planning on being a sex toy for boys to use forever?" Bella asks.'
+			'"God, you sound like my mother..." you reply unimpressed.'
+			'"You need Jesus. Literally." Bella rolls her eyes and shakes her head before walking away.'                 
 		elseif npc_rel['A22'] <= 20:
-			'"Hey Bella, got a minute?" You chime in.'
-			'"Me? A minute? For you? Do I look like I want to have a STD, you slut?" she scoffs.'
-			'"Well it is not that bad, it only hurts when peeing" you try to snap back at her.' 
-			'She sighs while she gives you a look of disgust, as she walks away rolling her eyes, and murmuring something about you don''t hear very well.'
+			'"Hey Bella, got a minute?" you ask.'
+			'"Me? A minute? For you? Do I look like I want an STD, you slut?" she scoffs.'
+			'"It''s not that bad. It only hurts when I pee." you try to snap back at her.' 
+			'She sighs while giving you a look of disgust. She then rolls her eyes and walks away, murmuring something about you that don''t quite hear.'
 		else
 			'"Oh, it''s you again." Bella sighs. "Shoo, slut!" she gestures you to leave.'
-			'"But.. snob" you murmur as you walk away.'     
+			'"Snob..." you murmur as you walk away.'     
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 1 or grupTipe = 2:
 		if npc_rel['A22'] >= 60:
-			'"Come here, you can''t believe what happened." Bella waves at you.'
-			'"What? Tell me." you say intrigued.'
-			'"You know that cafe at the train station, right?" Bella, in brisk manner.'
-			'"Uhmh" you nod back, knowing your mom works there.'
-			'"The guy there, some old fart suggested Irina should blow him!? Can you believe it! Just because her card got rejected. What a creep!"'
-			'"And we vowed not to go back there, like ever! And besides there''s a nice cafeteria in Pushkin where we sometimes hang out" "You should join us sometimes" she adds as the two of you talk, well mostly she talks about other problems she has had with people more than anything.'   
+			'"Come here, you won''t believe what happened!" Bella says while waving you over.'
+			'"What? Tell me." you reply, intrigued.'
+			'"You know that cafe at the train station, right?" she asks in a brisk manner.'
+			'"Uhmh..." you nod back, knowing your mother works there.'
+			'"The old fart that works suggested that Irina should blow him!? Can you believe it! Just because her card got rejected. What a creep!"'
+			'"We vowed never to go back there, like ever! Besides, there''s a nice cafe in Pushkin where we sometimes hang out. You should join us sometime." she adds as the two of you talk. Well she talks, mostly about other problems she''s had with people more than anything.'   
 		elseif npc_rel['A22'] <= 20:
-			'"What do you want?" Bella arrogantly looks at you as you approach her.'
+			'"What do you want?" Bella arrogantly asks as you approach her.'
 			'"I just wanted to ask you about this store in the city. I heard..."'
-			'Before you''re able to continue she cuts you off, looks at her pedicure and, with a sigh, replies. "Listen..." but before she managed to answer any further Irina whispered something in her ear and both of their eyes evil up.'
-			'"You know, actually, why you don''t come with us?" Bella quickly suggests "Saturday midday at the city central station, Irina, that''s good for you, too?" "Uhm" Irina smiles.'
-			'"See, settled." Bella smiles and gives you a hug before going her ways.'
+			'Before you''re able to continue she cuts you off and looks at her pedicure with a sigh. "Listen..." Before she can answer, Irina whispers something in her ear and both of their eyes evil up.'
+			'"You know, actually, why you don''t come with us?" Bella quickly suggests. "Saturday midday at the city station. That''s good for you, right Irina?" Irina just smiles.'
+			'"See? Settled." Bella smiles and gives you a hug before going on her way.'
 		else
-			'"Hey, <<$pcs_nickname>>, there''s always have been something I have wanted to ask for a long time now." Bella intrigued.'
-			'"Shoot, girl." you answer quickly.'
-			'"What''s thing between you and Christina, when you two talk I always sense some ..tension ..between you two. Boyfriend issues or some?"'
-			'"Uff" you sigh "that''s a longer story, some other time."'
-			'"Okay, no hurry." Bella assures you.'  
+			'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, there''s something I''ve wanted to ask you for a long time now." Bella says in an intrigued tone.'
+			'"Shoot," you answer quickly.'
+			'"What''s the deal between you and Christina? When you two talk, I always sense some... tension between the two of you. Boyfriend issues or something?"'
+			'"Ugh," you sigh. "That''s a long story for another time."'
+			'"Okay, no hurry." she assures you.'  
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
 		if npc_rel['A22'] >= 70:
-			'You see Bella waving at you to get your attention.'
-			'"Hey, <<$pcs_nickname>>, can I take a really quick look at your notes for the next class, thanks." She takes your notebook before you could even offer.'
-			'"..and hello, of course what friends are for." you reconcile.'
-			'"Yeah, I got home really late. Hey, you will be going to Uni after graduation, right?" she keeps conversation on while taking snaps with her phone.'  
-			'"I''m thinking of it, of course it would be interesting but which school and so much different things on consideration you know." you light up a little.' 
-			'"Yeah, get out of this shithouse would be nice." Bella chuckles while pointing over her shoulder on few gopniks who getting out from restroom followed by Petia who has his hair visible wet. You talk for a bit as she snaps photo''s of your notes, once she is done she smiles to you and walks off.'   
+			'You see Bella waving at you to get your attention. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, can I take a quick look at your notes for the next class, thanks." She takes your notebook before you can even answer.'
+			'"Hello to you too. Of course, what are friends for?" you reply.'
+			'"Yeah, I got home really late. Hey, you''ll be going to Uni after graduation, right?" she keeps the conversation going while taking photos with her phone.'  
+			'"I''m thinking of it. Of course, it would be interesting but which one? There'''s so many different things to consider studying as well, you know."' 
+			'"Yeah, getting out of this shithouse would be nice," Bella chuckles while pointing over her shoulder at some gopniks leaving the bathroom followed by Petia, whose his hair is visibly wet. You talk for a bit as she snaps photos of your notes. Once she''s done, she smiles at you and walks away.'   
 		elseif npc_rel['A22'] <= 20:
 			'"Make it quick <<$pcs_nickname>>! I don''t really have the time to stand here and chat..." Bella hurries you on.'
-			'"I was thinking we could maybe hang after school one day?" you shyly ask.'
-			'"You and I?" she looks around. "Is this a prank? Where have you hidden the cameras? What I could probably gain hanging out with you?" She forwardly asks while giving you a judgmental look from head to the toe and back.' 
-			'"I don''t know.., I could do your homework!?" you cheerfully suggesting' 
+			'"I was thinking we could maybe hang out after school one day?" you shyly ask.'
+			'"You and I?" she looks around. "Is this a prank? Where have you hidden the cameras? What I could possibly gain from hanging out with you?" she asks while giving you a judgmental look from head to toe.' 
+			'"I don''t know... I could do your homework!?" you cheerfully suggest.' 
 			'"Don''t be silly! Run along now, kid." She scoffs you aside.'
 		else
-			'"Do you also play SWTOR?" you step up and ask her indiscreet.'
-			'"Swto.. what.. what is it? Sex with old and retired?" she asks sternly.'  
-			'"Emh, ee, no, no," baffled at first "it''s a Star Wars game you silly." you explain enthusiastically.'
-			'"Babe, two things: you don''t call me silly ..and, no that would be a social suicide." Bella scoffs.'
-			'You try to talk to her a bit more but she mostly ignores you, when the bell rings and you both go your ways she taps your shoulder and adds "The Phantom Menace is the best."'
-			'"Wait, how do you.., did you just play me." you''ll get a no answer for that one, just a sly wink.'
+			'"Do you play SWTOR?" you ask her.'
+			'"Swto.. What?.. What''s it? Sex with old and retired?" she asks sternly.'  
+			'"Umm... No... It''s a Star Wars game, silly!" you explain enthusiastically.'
+			'"Babe, two things: You don''t call me silly. And no, that would be social suicide." she scoffs.'
+			'You try to talk to her a bit more, but she mostly ignores you. When the bell rings and you both go your own ways, she taps your shoulder. "The Phantom Menace is the best."'
+			'"Wait, how do you... Did you just play me?" You only get a sly wink as an answer.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
 		if npc_rel['A22'] >= 70:
-			'You brashly squeeze yourself between Bella and her friends but all lighten up soonish when you start sharing stories of petty crimes and practical jokes the gopniks have been up to.'
-			'"Psst, <<$pcs_nickname>> , you are with them, and don''t tell her we asked.. but are stories about Vitek''s sister true." she and girls approach you in interest and giggling at the same time.'
-			'"Well, girl never tells on her friends." you dodge the question brashly with sly smile.'
-			'"C''mon, be cool." girls in one pleading voice while some of them mimicking zipping their mouth, you''ll leave with a wink and left them wanting for more, like true gopnitsa.'
+			'You brashly squeeze yourself between Bella and her friends, who all lighten up when you start sharing stories of the petty crimes and practical jokes the gopniks have been performing.'
+			'"Psst <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re with them. Don''t tell her we asked, but are the stories about Vitek''s sister true?" Bella asks and the other girls start giggling.'
+			'"A girl never tells on her friends!" you dodge the question brashly with a sly smile.'
+			'"Come on, be cool!" the girls plead and some of them mimic zipping their mouth. You walk away with a wink and leave them wanting for more.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A22'] <= 20:
-			'Wait there, one second." Bella shouts you before you get any closer.'
-			'"What? What is snob?" you scoff.'
-			'"Just made sure before you get any closer I swallowed my gold rings, like these not getting stolen."'
-			'"You snooty cow, did jou just you called me a thief Wanna get your pretty face smashed or what, bitch." you got pumped up. Though before it got change to escalate any further some teacher stepped between you two and gave you both a boring lecture how people back in the days grass was greener.'
+			'Wait there one second!" Bella shouts at you before you get any closer.'
+			'"What? What''s wrong, snob?" you scoff.'
+			'"Just made sure to swallow my rings before you get any closer. I don''t want these getting stolen."'
+			'"You snooty bitch! Did you just you call me a thief?! You want your pretty face smashed in or what, bitch?!" Before things escalate any further, some teachers step between the two of you and give you both a boring lecture about children back in the day and how the grass was greener.'
 		else
-			'"Hey, do you have.. you know, some.. grass" Bella asks in sneaky manner.'
-			'"Bitch, do I look like drug dealer to you." you answer slyly.'
-			'You suggest she go try her luck with Vitek and she says "Fine I will."'
-			'The two of you talk for a bit more but it isn''t a comfortable conversation.'
+			'"Hey, do you have any... You know, grass?" Bella asks in a sneaky manner.'
+			'"Bitch, do I look like a drug dealer to you?" you answer sternly and suggest she try her luck with Vitek.' 
+			'"Fine, I will!" The two of you talk a bit more, but it isn''t a comfortable conversation.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A22'] >= 70:
-			'"You know, you should come and hang out with me and my friends." Bella says smiling.'
-			'"You really mean that?" you ask as your eyes widen. "You think I''ll fit in with them?"'
-			'Bella nods. "No doubt! You''ll have no issues fitting in".' 
+			'"You know, you should come and hang out with me and my friends," Bella says with a smile.'
+			'"You really mean that?!" you ask as your eyes widen. "You think I''ll fit in with them?"'
+			'Bella nods. "No doubt! You''ll have no issues fitting in."' 
 			'Before parting ways she adds "I''ll be seeing you around and we can plan something, no?"'
 		else
-			'"Oh, it''s you again." Bella sighs. "I don''t have time to deal with you today, go bother someone else." With that she ignores you for the rest of the time.'
-			'But before you could even say something you feel someone has a firm grip of your skirt and starting to pull it down while you do try to fight it back'
-			'"Boris, pull it down already, you wanker" some boys from the parallel class encouraging their friend You hear a hit' 
+			'"Oh, it''s you again." Bella sighs. "I don''t have time to deal with you today, so go bother someone else." With that, she turns around and ignores you.'
+			'Before you can say something, you feel someone take a firm grip of your skirt and start pulling it down while you try to fight back.'
+			'"Come on Boris, pull it down already, you wanker!" Some boys from another class are encouraging their friend.' 
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -958,7 +954,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lizaveta':
 			act 'Latest gossip': gt 'gschool_coolkid_chats', 'lizaveta_latest_gossip'
 		elseif npc_rel['A140'] <= 20:
 			'"You know, you really shouldn''t shit where you sleep." Lizaveta says while shaking her head disapprovingly.'
-			'"What? What is that supposed to mean?" you ask, but she just sighs.'
+			'"What? What''s that supposed to mean?" you ask, but she just sighs.'
 			'"You''re dumber than I thought..." she mutters. You try to get an answer out of her, but she dances around your questions while talking to Bella.'
 		else
 			'You spend some time talking with Lizaveta, and for a while you manage to avoid talking about anything gossipy, but considering she''s the queen of it, it eventually devolves into some "He said, she said."'
@@ -1082,8 +1078,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Marcus_Katja_talk':
 	menu_off = 1
 	katjaQW['marcus_asked'] = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big146.jpg"></center>'
-	'"So you know how we sometimes have fun together?" you ask him.'
-	'"Yeah?" he answers and you smile. "Well, I have this friend who have never been with a boy before but would like to try. So I was wondering if you were up for helping me give her an amazing first time? She''s '+iif( hotcat < hotcat_rating['A14'], 'even hotter that I am', 'totally hot')+' so you won''t regret it."'
+	'"So you know how we sometimes have fun together?" you ask.'
+	'"Yeah?" he answers and you smile. "Well, I have this friend who''s never been with a boy before, but would like to try it. So I was wondering if you were up for helping me give her an amazing first time? She''s '+iif( hotcat < hotcat_rating['A14'], 'even hotter than I am,', 'totally hot,')+' so you won''t regret it."'
 	'"Are you asking me if I want to have a threesome with two beautiful girls, with one of them even being a virgin?" he asks with a surprised look on his face. "Of course I''m up for this!" he exclaims as his face turns into a huge grin.'
 	'"Great," you answer. "I''ll call you with her address when we are ready. But you have to be discrete, we don''t want any rumors spread around!" you tell him and he smiles. "Of course, I''m a gentleman and gentlemen never kiss and tell. I look forward to your call."'
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -1171,95 +1167,94 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mefodiy':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big148.jpg"></center>'
 	if fame['pav_slut'] > 250:
 		if npc_rel['A148'] >= 50:
-			'"I hear you''ve been a naughty girl, slutting it up. Someone should give you a spanking but you''d probably like it. Maybe I could help you there, if we stick to the spanking."'
-			'"Sure you don''t want more?" you tease'
-			'"I''m sure there''s a lot of guy that''s take you up on that offer but it''s not my bag."'
-			'You wrap an arm around him and stroke his chest, "Aww, you don''t know what you''re missing."'
-			'"Oh I do but if by some bizarre act of God I change my preferences you''ll be the first one I call.'
+			'"I hear you''ve been a naughty girl, slutting it up. Someone should give you a spanking, but you''d probably like it. Maybe I could help you there, if we stick to the spanking."'
+			'"Sure you don''t want more?" you tease.'
+			'"I''m sure there''s a lot of guy that''ll take you up on that offer, but it''s not my bag."'
+			'You wrap an arm around him and stroke his chest. "Aww, you don''t know what you''re missing."'
+			'"Oh I do, but if by some bizarre act of God I change my preferences, you''ll be the first one I call.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A148'] <= 20:
-			'"Oh, its <<pcs_nickname>> the school bike. Hope you''re not here for my cock as that ain''t gonna happen."'
-			'"Please, I''ve heard the rumours and know where that thing''s been." You retort.'
+			'"Oh, it''s <<$pcs_nickname>> the school bike. Hope you''re not here for my cock as that ain''t gonna happen."'
+			'"Please, I''ve heard the rumours and know where that thing''s been!" you retort.'
 			'"Yet I still have my reputation and you don''t, so maybe we''re the same except I''m not a fucking idiot about it?"'
 		else
-			'"Shit <<pcs_firstname>>, what happened to you? You should be more discreet the kids in this school are fucking cruel to anyone they think is a slut."'
-			'"It''s not like I ran an article in the school newspaper, some guys just don''t know when to keep quiet."'
+			'"Shit <<$pcs_firstname>>, what happened to you? You should be more discreet! The kids in this school are fucking cruel to anyone they think is a slut."'
+			'"It''s not like I ran an article in the school newspaper! Some guys just don''t know when to keep quiet."'
 			'"Some? More like all of them." You both laugh as he gives you a big and over dramatic hug.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 1:
 		if npc_rel['A148'] >= 50:
-			'Hey, <<pcs_nickname>> how''s it going?'
-			'You know there''s a hug coming regardless so you make the first move and snuggle up to him.'
-			'"Come on you''ll make all the boys jealous."'
-			'You smile up and him and whisper, "I thought that was your job."'
-			'He laughs and pouts as he replies, "Well sure that''s what I meant."'
+			'Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, how''s it going?'
+			'You know there''s a hug coming regardless, so you make the first move and snuggle up to him.'
+			'"Come on, you''ll make all the boys jealous."'
+			'You smile up and him and whsiper "I thought that was your job?"'
+			'He laughs and pouts as he replies "Well sure, that''s what I meant."'
 		elseif npc_rel['A148'] <= 20:
-			'I still don''t know how you got in to our little group, you''re dragging all our reputations down'
-			'You pout, "I''m not sure how I could drag your reputation any lower."'
-			'"We could have sex." He pauses then starts to giggle, "Sorry that''s not fair."'
+			'"I still don''t know how you got into our little group. You''re dragging all our reputations down!"'
+			'You pout. "I''m not sure how I could drag your reputation any lower."'
+			'"We could have sex." He pauses then starts to giggle. "Sorry, that''s not fair."'
 			'You feign shock and mouth the words "You bitch" at him.'
 			'He feigns shock back at you.'
 		else
-			'"Hiya <<pcs_firstname>>, what''s on your mind?"'
-			'"You know? Usual shit."'
-			'"Same here." He puts an arm around you, "A hug''ll make it better."'
-			'You don''t have much choice but to hug this soppy guy and it does raise your mood.'
+			'"Hiya <<$pcs_firstname>>, what''s on your mind?"'
+			'"You know, usual shit."'
+			'"Same here." He puts an arm around you. "A hug''ll make it all better."'
+			'You don''t have much choice but to hug this soppy guy, but it does raise your mood.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 2:
 		if npc_rel['A148'] >= 50:
 			'"If it isn''t my favourite jock, what''s up?"'
 			'"I''m good, plenty of training to be done. Got to keep up with the opposition."'
-			'Mefodiy starts feeling your biceps and waist as if measuring you, "You''re in good shape, maybe a little tense."'
+			'Mefodiy starts feeling your biceps and waist as if measuring you. "You''re in good shape, maybe a little tense."'
 			'"You think so?"'
-			'"Don''t worry I know just the thing." At which point he grabs you in a tight hug.'
-			'You laugh, "If you wanted a hug you could have just asked, you big softy."'
+			'"Don''t worry, I know just the thing." He suddenly grabs you in a tight hug.'
+			'You laugh. "If you wanted a hug you could have just asked, you big softy."'
 		elseif npc_rel['A148'] <= 20:
-			'"What do you want sporty?" He asks.'
+			'"What do you want, sporty?" he asks.'
 			'"Just to chat."'
-			'"OK but keep it quick I''ve got things to do."'
+			'"Okay, but keep it quick. I''ve got things to do."'
 		else
-			'"Hey there <<pcs_firstname>>, win any medals today?"'
-			'"Yeah, loads. I''m gonna have to build an extension just to house them all"'
-			'He grabs you in a big hug, "Well done champ!"'
-			'You push him back off you, "Yeah, yeah, very funny."'
+			'"Hey there <<$pcs_firstname>>, win any medals today?"'
+			'"Yeah, loads. I''m gonna have to build an extension just to house them all!"'
+			'He grabs you in a big hug. "Well done champ!"'
+			'You push him off you. "Yeah yeah, very funny."'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
 		if npc_rel['A148'] >= 50:
 			'"Hi there brainiac, how''s it going?"'
-			'"Work to do, got grades to get, something you should be doing." You say poking him in the chest.'
-			'"Yeah, I know I should work a bit harder but you should take time to chill a bit more. Neither of us are prefect." He replies gently poking you back on your collar bone.'
+			'"Work to do and grades to get, something you should be doing!" you say while poking him in the chest.'
+			'"Yeah, I know I should work a bit harder, but you should take time to chill a bit more. Neither of us are perfect," he replies and gently pokes you back on your collar bone.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A148'] <= 20:
-			'"What do you want nerd?" He says looking down on you both physically and figuratively.'
-			'"I erm.. err.. just wanted to talk to you"'
-			'He rolls his eyes, "Fine."'
+			'"What do you want nerd?" he asks while looking down on you both physically and figuratively.'
+			'"I erm.. Err.. Just wanted to talk to you..."'
+			'He rolls his eyes. "Fine."'
 		else
-			'"Hi <<pcs_firstname>>, taking a break from you studies?" He says with a hint of a smile.'
-			'"Yeah, got to work hard, get a good job and all that"'
-			'"That''s a good plan just don''t over do it"'
+			'"Hi <<$pcs_firstname>>, taking a break from your studies?" he asks with a hint of a smile.'
+			'"Yeah, got to work hard, get a good job and all that."'
+			'"That''s a good plan, just don''t over do it."'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
 		if npc_rel['A148'] >= 50:
-			'"Hey <<pcs_nickname>>, still hanging around with those a-holes? You can do better than them."'
-			'You flip him the bird.'
-			'He laughs and gives you a hug.'
-			'"Shit man, respect my personal space!" You say pushing him back.'
+			'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, still hanging around with those a-holes? You can do better than them."'
+			'You flip him the bird and he laughs and gives you a hug.'
+			'"Shit man, respect my personal space!" you say while pushing him back.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A148'] <= 20:
-			'"The fuck is it you want?"'
-			'"I wanted to know if the rumours are true, I hear you''d rather cock than these puppies." You say cupping your breasts.'
-			'"Those probably smell more of cock than any cock I''ve ever seen."'
+			'"The fuck you want?"'
+			'"I wanted to know if the rumours are true. I hear you''d rather have cock than these puppies," you say while cupping your breasts.'
+			'"Those probably smell more of cock than any cock I''ve ever seen!"'
 		else
 			'"I don''t want any trouble, so just spit it out."'
-			'"I just want to chat, I''m not here to cause trouble." You say holding your hands up.'
+			'"I just want to chat, I''m not here to cause trouble." you reply while holding your hands up.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A148'] >= 50:
-			'"Hey sweetie, you know I could help you get in to a decent social group. You just gotta put a bit of work in to it."'
-			'Mef is about the only guy that doesn''t treat you like an outcast, he''d make a great bf if you know he was into that kind of thing.'
+			'"Hey sweetie, you know I could help you get into a decent social group. You just gotta put a bit of work into it."'
+			'Mefodiy is about the only guy who doesn''t treat you like an outcast. He''d make a great boyfriend if you knew he was into that kind of thing.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A148'] <= 20:
-			'"Don''t worry I''m not gonna give you the usual crap. I''m sure you get plenty of that from the others."'
-			'You don''t expect a cool kid to be nice but don''t know if its genuine or some trick. You play it safe and just say, "Thanks."'
+			'"Don''t worry, I''m not gonna give you the usual crap. I''m sure you get plenty of that from the others."'
+			'You don''t expect a cool kid to be nice, but don''t know if it''s genuine or some trick. You play it safe and just say "Thanks."'
 		else
-			'"Hey there <<pcs_firstname>>, we gotta get you in to a social group, it''ll make everything that bit easier for you."'
-			'"I''m working on it!" He has a point, life can be tough as an outcast.'
+			'"Hey there <<$pcs_firstname>>, we gotta get you into a social group. It''ll make everything that bit easier for you."'
+			'"I''m working on it!" He has a point. Life can be tough as an outcast.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
@@ -1362,87 +1357,86 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'irina':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big17.jpg"></center>'
 	if fame['pav_slut'] > 200:
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 90:
-			'<<$pcs_nickname>>, what did the virgin say after her first blowjob?'
-			'"I don''t know, what did she say?" you ask, meanwhile Irina uses the opportunity of you speaking to take her mouth full of water.'
-			'"I love you." while water dripping out of her mouth implying cum that poor virgin had just swallowed.' 
+			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, what did the virgin say after her first blowjob?" Irina asks.'
+			'"I don''t know, what did she say?" you reply and Irina takes a mouthful of water.'
+			'"I love you!" she replies and the water drips out of her mouth, Irina implying that it''s cum.' 
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
-			'"I would rather have Petia staring at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, wench!" Irina hisses with disgust. "Keep your legs together, cunt, this isn''t a whorehouse! A fucking school! You are a fucking embarrassment for everyone who goes to this school, you know that right?" Irina taunts you before she spits in front of your legs "Use this as a moisture to go fuck yourself."'
-			'You let her finish her rant to put your hand under your skirt and let fingers slide over your clit "When there''s a itch you got to scratch it you know." while you let Irina stand there for the rest of the break, shocked what just had happened.'
+			'"I would rather have Petia stare at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, slut!" Irina hisses with disgust. "Keep your legs together, cunt! This isn''t a whorehouse, it''s a fucking school! You''re a fucking embarrassment, you know that?" Irina taunts you before she spits in front of your legs "Use this as lube to go and fuck yourself!"'
+			'You let her finish her rant before putting your hand under your skirt and letting your fingers slide over your clit. "When there''s an itch, you''ve got to scratch it!" Irina stands silently, shocked at your actions.'
 		else
-			'"I would rather have Petia staring at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, wench!" Irina hisses with disgust.'
+			'"I would rather have Petia stare at my tits until he creams himself than to talk to you, slut!" Irina hisses with disgust.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 1:
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 60:
-			'"Gosh, look at this Natasha girl, she''s so pathetic, right? Pfft, she liked obsessed with us or something." Irina narrates while giving her a fake smile while Natasha passes on her way to hang out with her fellow nerds, she smiles back and once she is no longer looking Irina rolls her eyes, after which the two of you chat for awhile about a variety of topics.'
+			'"God, look at that Natasha girl. She''s so pathetic, right? She''s so obsessed with us!" Irina narrates while giving her a fake smile as Natasha passes on her way to hang out with her fellow nerds. Once she''s no longer looking, Irina rolls her eyes and the two of you chat for a while about a variety of topics.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
-			'"My advice is to sleep with as many people as possible." Irina recommend.' 
-			'"But that would make me a slut, wouldn''t it?" you question.'
-			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, everybody does it, it''s just that nobody talks about it." she assures you.'
-			'"So, it''s like a secret society?" you rivet.'
-			'"That''s one way looking at it." she nods in approving manner, then gives you a friendly smile before walking off.'
+			'"My advice is to sleep with as many people as possible," Irina says.' 
+			'"But that would make me a slut, wouldn''t it?" you reply.'
+			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, everybody does it. It''s just that nobody talks about it," she assures you.'
+			'"So, it''s like a secret society?"'
+			'"That''s one way looking at it..." she nods in an approving manner, then gives you a friendly smile before walking away.'
 		else
-			'"Liza told me that some girl overheard this group of girls talking at lunch that they heard Stasya talking shit about me!" Irina exclaims and the both of you let out a little gasp, even though it really isn''t much of a surprise.'
+			'"Liza told me that some girl overheard this group of girls talking at lunch. Apparently, they heard Stasya talking shit about me!" Irina exclaims and the both of you let out a little gasp, even though it really isn''t much of a surprise.'
 			'"What did she say?"'
-			'"Oh I wouldn''t dare repeat the things she said. It would just leave a bad taste in my mouth." Irina shakes her head in disappointment, but you notice the hint of a smirk on her lips. "Jealousy is such an ugly look..." The two of you gossip a bit until the bell rings.'
+			'"Oh I wouldn''t dare repeat the things she said. It would just leave a bad taste in my mouth." Irina shakes her head in disappointment, but you notice the hint of a smirk on her lips. "Jealousy is such an ugly look..." The two of you continue gossiping until the bell rings.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 2:
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 70:
-			'"Back when we where kids Bella tried to ride a cow." Irina giggles'
-			'"Like freaking real life cow? How it go?" you being curious ask.'
-			'"She did managed for few minutes before the cow shook her off ..she landed in cowshit." she crack open, laughing.'
-			'"But you didn''t hear it from me, right?" Irina chuckles.'
-			'"Haha, sure." you assure Irina her secret is safe.'
-			'"What you girls laughing there?" Bella shouts from distance on her way back from restroom.' 
-			'"Nothing, nothing." almost synchronized manner though you both still keep giggling for some time accompanied by Bella''s eyeroll and a deep sigh "Effing kindergarten, seriously."' 
+			'"Back when we were kids, Bella tried to ride a cow." Irina giggles'
+			'"What, like a real life cow? How''d that go?" you ask curiously.'
+			'"She managed for few minutes before the cow shook her off and she landed in cowshit!" she cackles. "But you didn''t hear it from me, okay?"'
+			'You tap your nose, assuring Irina her secret is safe is safe with you.'
+			'"What are you girls laughing at?" Bella shouts from a distance on her way back from the restroom.' 
+			'"Nothing, nothing..." you both reply in a near synchronized manner, though you both keep giggling for some time as Bella rolls her eyes and sighs deeply. "Effing kindergarten, seriously."' 
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
 			'Irina listens to you talk with a tired and bored expression. "Oh god, I think I''d rather talk to Lesco..." she yawns before brushing you off.'
 		else		
-			'You try to make small talk with Irina, and to your surprise, she doesn''t instantly turn you away. Seeing as though she hasn''t said anything yet, you keep talking to her, even if she hasn''t said much... of anything yet. Falling quiet, you hear the faint sound of music and realize she''s being wearing earpods this whole time.'
+			'You try to make small talk with Irina, and to your surprise, she doesn''t instantly turn you away. Seeing as though she hasn''t said anything yet, you keep talking to her, even though she hasn''t said much of anything yet. Falling quiet, you hear the faint sound of music and realize she''s being wearing earpods the whole time.'
 			'With comical timing, Irina pulls them out when she finally notices you standing next to her. "What do you want?" she sneers.'
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 3:
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 80:
 			'"I need to get my nails done, but I won''t have time with all this stupid homework!" Irina whines with a pout.'
-			'"I''m sure Feofan or Petka would be more than happy to help you out." you gently remind her.'
+			'"I''m sure Feofan or Petka would be more than happy to help you out," you gently remind her.'
 			'A sly smile spreads across Irina''s face. "You''re totally right <<$pcs_nickname>>! You know me so well."'
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
-			'You''ll see Irina sweet talking Artem for some reason or another, probably to do her homework. How can someone so charming be so manipulative?!'
-			'"Artem, grow a pair, she just using you." you shout unexpectedly.'
-			'"What a rude girl <<$pcs_nickname>> is, I think you have a wonderful pair." Irina doesn''t let bother herself from your attempt of intervention, even takes it a bit further and let her hand slide over Artem''s crotch "Ooh, I''m so clumsy, you''ll help me right." Irina whispers into his her while Artem''s can just nod face red like lobster and growing bulge in his pants.'
-			'Once he agree''s she smiles then walks past him to you "You are out of your league, bitch, never interrupt me ever or you regret it." she hisses while walking past you, extra close, intimidating way.' 
+			'You see Irina sweet talking Artem for some reason, probably to do her homework. How can someone so charming be so manipulative?!'
+			'"Grow a pair, Artem! She''s just using you!" you shout at them.'
+			'"What a rude girl <<$pcs_nickname>> is! I think you have a wonderful pair..." Irina doesn''t let your attempt at intervention bother her, even taking it further and letting her hand slide over Artem''s crotch. "Oops, I''m so clumsy! You''ll help me, right?" You can see the growing bulge in his pants as his face turns bright red.'
+			'Once he agrees, she smiles and walks over to you. "You''re out of your league, bitch! Never interrupt me again or you''ll regret it!" she hisses while walking past you in an intimidating manner.' 
 		else
-			'"That Ben Solo looks really hot, I think I would let him do everything he wants with me. You think he''s single?" Irina thinking out loud.' 
-			'"I''m more into Luke myself." you keep your cool'
-			'"Who, the old man who trained Rey?" she surprised and mimicking cock getting soft with his little finger'
-			'"Gawwd, he was still young in the original movies, like the Empire Strikes Back or The New Hope." you will try to explain'
-			'"I don''t watch old movies ..they''re old." she shrugs.'  
+			'"That Ben Solo is <i>so</i> hot. I would let him do anything he wants with me... You think he''s single?" Irina asks out loud.' 
+			'"I''m more into Luke myself..." you reply while keeping your cool.'
+			'"Who? You mean the old man who trained Rey?" she asks in surprise while mimicking a cock getting soft with her finger.'
+			'"He was young and cute in the originals! You know, A New Hope, Empire Strikes Back?" you explain.'
+			'"I don''t watch old movies. They''re... old." she shrugs.'  
 		end
 	elseif grupTipe = 4:
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 70:
-			'"You know that ..I think in 9th grade ..we girls had Lavrenti over because we wanted to borrow his camera for new shots for our social media and when he got over then Bella suggested as thank you that we kill the lights and see which one of us would dare getting naked in front of him. When the light was switched back on ..of course we were joking and none of us got naked, but he had a largest boner I had ever seen." she giggles.'
-			'"Wow, you girls really surprise me sometimes." You''ll let out, maybe with a light hint of disappointment of waiting something more juicy.' 
-			'"I know, right?!" giggling, while mimicking with her hands the size of Lavrenti''s penis like fisherman who describes his ever growing catch.' 
+			'"You know that, I think it was in 9th grade, we girls had Lavrenti over because we wanted to borrow his camera for new shots for our social media and when he arrived, Bella suggested we kill the lights and see which one of us would dare get naked in front of him as a thank you. Of course, we were joking, so when the light were switched back on none of us were naked, but he had the biggest boner I''d ever seen!" she giggles.'
+			'"Wow, you girls really surprise me sometimes..." you reply with a hint of disappointment, hoping for something more juicy.' 
+			'"I know, right?!" She giggles while mimicking the size of Lavrenti''s cock with her hands like a fisherman describing his catch.' 
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
-			'"Oh, it is you lowlife, thought you were in prison, dropped out of school or something by now, but no, last year of school, that must really be an accomplishment for you right?" Irina mocks'
-			'"You keep moving your mouth like this I''m gonna use that pretty tongue of yours to clean out my asshole soon-ish rather than later."'
-			'"Well, I wondered where the stink come, seems we found our source." she resume to ridicule you.'
-			'"Fuck, bitch.. you''re getting it now!" you storm towards her before Lavrenti and Lena gets hold off you. "We are in school, later, later, calm." your friends calm you down and assure you get your revenge later.'  
+			'"Oh, it''s you. The lowlife. I thought you would''ve dropped out or be in jail by now, but nooo, last year of school! That must really be an accomplishment for you, right?" Irina says mockingly.'
+			'"Keep running your mouth like that and I''m gonna use that tongue of yours to clean my asshole!"'
+			'"I was wondering where that horrible smell was coming from!" she says and continues to ridicule you.'
+			'"Fuck you bitch, you''re getting it now!" You storm towards her before Lavrenti and Lena grab hold of you. "We''re in school, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You can kick her smug ass later, so calm down before the teachers hear you!"'  
 		else
-			'"Psst, you know where to get some, you know ..green?" Irina whispers.'
-			'"What, you think because I''m a gopnik I know every fucking drug dealer in the town? Is that what you fucking saying to me?" you provoke her a little.'
-			'"Not that, god, no, of course not." she tries to explain herself.' 
-			'"In front of Five-Eight, at evening there''s a guy.. with your pretty face and lips maybe you could even get a discount if you know what I mean." you laugh.'
-			'"What is wrong with you, no, gross! But anyway, thanks, <<$pcs_nickname>>." while you both parting ways you give her an air gestures of blowjobs and and holding an imaginary weed on your other hand.'
+			'"Psst, you know where to get some, you know... green?" Irina whispers at you.'
+			'"What, you think just because I''m a gopnik I know every fucking drug dealer in town? Is that what you''re saying?" you angrily reply.'
+			'"God no, of course not!" she says trying to explain herself.' 
+			'"There''s a guy in front of the Five-Eight in the evening. Your pretty face and those nice lips might get you a discount, if you know what I mean..." you laugh.'
+			'"Eeeww, gross! What''s wrong with you?! Thanks anyway, <<$pcs_nickname>>." As you''re parting ways, you give her an air gesture of a blowjob while holding an imaginary bag of weed in the other hand.'
 		end
 	else
 		if npc_rel['A1'] >= 90:
-			'It''s easy to please Irina since she likes to talk about herself. So long as you ask her about herself and then don''t interrupt her, she''s more than happy to talk with you.'
+			'It''s easy to please Irina since she likes to talk about herself. So long as you ask her about herself and don''t interrupt her, she''s more than happy to talk with you.'
 		elseif npc_rel['A1'] <= 20:
-			'"Hey, Irina, the next class.." you will try to inquire'	
-			'If you ever take my name into your mouth I will make sure that the second hand blow up doll that''s used by Lesco and Petia in their threesome will be standing in a higher position in our schools social ladder than you, scum. That''s your position here, in this school. God, I can''t have even five minutes time for myself." Irina pissed.'
+			'"Hey Irina, about the next class.." you try to inquire.'	
+			'If you ever try talking to me again, I''ll make sure the second hand blow up doll Lesco and Petia use in their threesome is more popular than you! God, I can''t have even five minutes to myself without some loser trying to talk to me!" she mumbles in an angry tone as she walks away.'
 			'Then she turns and walks away from you.'
 		else	
-			'"You don’t have any friends do you?" Irina with a stern unimpressed looks. "And you won''t ever find any either." Then she turns and ignores you.'
+			'"You don’t have any friends, do you?" Irina asks with a stern, unimpressed look. "And you won''t ever find any either." She then turns around and ignores you.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'

locations/pav_disco_gopniks.qsrc

@@ -1554,7 +1554,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anushka_dance':
 						act 'Want to go fuck?':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/anushka_dance4.jpg"></center>'
-							'She starts to giggle as you hump her, obviously finding the whole situation amusing. The boys on the other hand seem to be fascinated by what they''re watching. You lean forward to see if she wants to take this somewhere private. "So, want to go somewhere more... private?"'
+							'She starts giggling as you hump her, obviously finding the whole situation amusing. The boys on the other hand seem to be fascinated by what they''re watching. You lean forward to see if she wants to take this somewhere private. "So, want to go somewhere more... private?"'
 							gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Make out':
@@ -1575,7 +1575,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anushka_dance':
 							act 'You want her to fuck you':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/anushka_dance4.jpg"></center>'
-								'She starts to giggle as you hump her, obviously finding the whole situation amusing. The boys on the other hand seem to be fascinated by what they''re watching. You lean forward to see if she wants to take this somewhere private. "I want you to take my strap-on and fuck me <i>hard</i> and <i>fast</i> with it."'
+								'She starts giggling as you hump her, obviously finding the whole situation amusing. The boys on the other hand seem to be fascinated by what they''re watching. You lean forward to see if she wants to take this somewhere private. "I want you to take my strap-on and fuck me <i>hard</i> and <i>fast</i> with it."'
 								gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Make out':
@@ -1597,7 +1597,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anushka_dance':
 							act 'You want to butt fuck her':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/disco/school_kids/anushka_dance4.jpg"></center>'
-								'She starts to giggle as you hump her, obviously finding the whole situation amusing. The boys on the other hand seem to be fascinated by what they''re watching. "I want to strap one on and fuck your tight little ass with it until we both cum."'
+								'She starts giggling as you hump her, obviously finding the whole situation amusing. The boys on the other hand seem to be fascinated by what they''re watching. "I want to strap one on and fuck your tight little ass with it until we both cum."'
 								gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Make out':

locations/pav_discoev1.qsrc

@@ -246,13 +246,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor_peg':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/igor/sex/disco/disco_peg1.jpg"></center>'
 	if strapnumber >= 5:
 		'You lead Igor down one of the halls to some offices. After checking a few doors, you find one that''s unlocked and the two of you slip inside the office. You pull the strap-on harness out of your purse and hold it in your hand. "Beg me to fuck you."'
-		'His eyes get huge, but you can tell he is turned on by you taking charge like this, but he is also shaking his head no at the massive size of the dildo.'
-		'"Oh my God!! That thing is to big it would hurt to much, are you crazy?!" his eyes widen.'
-		*nl
-		'"What? You already let me fuck you with one before" you grin, looking at him.'
-		'"No!, that is way to big, a smaller one is ok, but not that thing." he says shaking his head no.'
-		'You sigh a bit and look down at the monster dildo, you know it is huge. But he won''t budge on trying it. "Ok I will get something smaller and we can do it next time." You tell him.'
-		'He nods. "Sounds good, I can''t wait." The two of you talk for a bit, before you decided it is time to leave and make sure to bring a smaller one with you next time.'
+		'His eyes grow wide. You can tell he''s turned on by you taking charge like this, but he''s also shaking his head at the massive size of the dildo.'
+		'"Oh my god, that thing is huge! It would hurt too much! Are you crazy?!"'
+		'"What? You already let me fuck you with one before." you grin while looking at him.'
+		'"No, that is way too big! A smaller one is okay, but not that thing!" he says while shaking his head.'
+		'You sigh and look down at the monster dildo, knowing he won''t budge on trying it. "Okay, I''ll get something smaller and we can do it next time."'
+		'He nods. "Sounds good, I can''t wait." The two of you talk for a bit before you decide it''s time to leave.'
 		act 'Go back to the disco': gt 'pav_disco'
 	else
 		'You lead Igor down one of the halls to some offices. After checking a few doors, you find one that''s unlocked and the two of you slip inside the office. You pull the strap-on harness out of your purse and hold it in your hand. "Beg me to fuck you."'
@@ -395,25 +394,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor_disco_bj':
 	menu_off = 1
 	act 'Get down on your knees':
 		*clr & cla
-
-		if npc_Sex['A4'] = 0: npc_Sex['A4'] = 1 & guy += 1
-
+		if npc_sex['A4'] = 0: npc_sex['A4'] = 1 & guy += 1
 		dick = 6
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/cocksucker5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You sit on your haunches and Igor pulls his dick out of his pants... and it takes all of your resolve to remain straight faced. His penis is tiny! Igor''s small, thin member sticks out of his pubic hair like a mushroom in a meadow - that image alone is enough to almost make you burst into laughter, especially considering that you''ve seen mushrooms bigger than that. But to your luck, it''s too dark for him to see your face twitch and a few coughs cover your stifled laughter until you are mentally prepared to do what you came here for.' 
-		*nl
-		'Actually feeling somewhat disappointed by his size, now that you''re getting to the blowjob part, you gently wrap your <<$pc_desc[''lips'']>> lips around the small cock... but sucking on it like you would a normal penis doesn''t work because you simply can''t bob up and down its length when there is no length to begin with. Even sucking on it is hard because of its size, or lack thereof.'
-		'So, instead, you begin to ''fondle it'' inside your mouth, squeezing it with your lips and licking it all over, swirling your tongue easily around most of it. Igor groans, audibly enjoying the treatment. More so than you expected, in fact, because not a minute after you''ve started, you notice his hips bucking against your head and taste a few bland drops of semen that would barely constitute a sip of water.'
-		*nl
-		'You can''t help but feel a little sorry for Igor: Having a tiny dick, no stamina AND only a few droplets of semen? The guy should apply for a certificate of disability. And the poor woman who''s gonna date him someday...'
-		'All in all, this was memorable in all the bad ways.'
-
+		'You sit on your haunches and Igor pulls his dick out of his pants. It takes all of your resolve to remain straight-faced. His penis is tiny! Igor''s small, thin member sticks out of his pubic hair like a mushroom in a meadow - that image alone is enough to almost make you burst into laughter, especially considering that you''ve seen mushrooms bigger than that. To your luck, it''s too dark for him to see your face and a few coughs cover your stifled laughter until you''re mentally prepared to do what you came here for.' 
+		'Feeling somewhat disappointed by his size, you gently wrap your <<$pc_desc[''lips'']>> lips around the small cock. Sucking on it like you would a normal penis doesn''t work because you simply can''t bob up and down its length when there''s no length to begin with. Even sucking on it is hard because of its size, or lack thereof.'
+		'Instead, you begin to ''fondle it'' inside your mouth, squeezing it with your lips and licking it all over, easily swirling your tongue around most of it. Igor groans, audibly enjoying the treatment. More so than you expected, in fact, because not a minute after you''ve started, you notice his hips bucking against your head and taste a few bland drops of semen that would barely constitute a sip of water.'
+		'You can''t help but feel a little sorry for Igor: Having a tiny dick, no stamina <i>and</i> only a few droplets of semen? This was memorable in all the wrong ways.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		
-		act 'Well, at least it''s over - Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
+		act 'At least it''s over':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	end
 end
 
@@ -421,21 +414,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'igor_dima_disco_bj':
 	menu_off = 1
 	act 'Get down on your knees':
 		*clr & cla
-
-		if npc_Sex['A4'] = 0: npc_Sex['A4'] = 1 & guy += 1
-
+		if npc_sex['A4'] = 0: npc_Sex['A4'] = 1 & guy += 1
 		dick = 6
 		spafinloc = 12
 		gs 'cum_manage'
 		swallow += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/group/cocksucker6.jpg"></center>'
-		'You sit on your haunches and Igor pulls his dick out of his pants... and it takes all of your resolve to remain straightfaced. His penis is tiny! Igor''s small, thin member sticks out of his pubic hair like a mushroom in a meadow - that image alone is enough to almost make you burst into laughter, especially considering that you''ve seen mushrooms bigger than that. Dimka''s 16cm dick looks like a tree trunk in comparison and only by focusing your eyes on him do you manage to maintain your composure.' 
-		*nl
-		'You take a cock into each hand and move your mouth back and forth between them. Until then, you haven''t been able to tell what a difference it makes to have a large dick to play with but now, being able to compare them side by side, you feel that it''s a lot more satisfying to suck a bigger dick like Dimka''s, and it shows in your enthusiasm.' 
-		*nl
-		'Not that Igor seems to mind, as long as you don''t stop. In fact, even though you''re paying more attention to Dimka, Igor is the first to be ready to come and Dimka roughly uses your mouth to catch up, then both stick the tips of their dicks between your lips and start cuming into your mouth. Igor''s sperm is barely even worth mentioning, little as there was, but of Dimka''s there was so much you almost couldn''t keep it all in your mouth - almost. You swallow the semen down in two gulps, lick your lips and show them your empty mouth. Satisfied, the boys button up their pants and go back inside.'
-
+		'You sit on your haunches and Igor pulls his dick out of his pants. It takes all of your resolve to remain straight-faced. His penis is tiny! Igor''s small, thin member sticks out of his pubic hair like a mushroom in a meadow - that image alone is enough to almost make you burst into laughter, especially considering that you''ve seen mushrooms bigger than that. Dimka''s dick looks like a tree trunk in comparison and only by focusing your eyes on him do you manage to maintain your composure.' 
+		'You take a cock into each hand and move your mouth back and forth between them. Until now, you haven''t been able to tell what a difference it makes to have a large dick to play with but now, being able to compare them side by side, you feel that it''s a lot more satisfying to suck a bigger dick like Dimka''s, and it shows in your enthusiasm.' 
+		'Not that Igor seems to mind, as long as you don''t stop. In fact, even though you''re paying more attention to Dimka, Igor is the first to be ready to cum and Dimka roughly uses your mouth to catch up before they both stick the tips of their dicks between your lips and start cumming in your mouth. Igor''s sperm is barely worth mentioning, but Dimka cums so much you almost can''t keep it all in your mouth. You swallow the semen down in two gulps, lick your lips and show them your empty mouth. Satisfied, the boys button up their pants and go back inside.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -450,72 +438,72 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'girlfriend_ask':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big4.jpg"></center>'
-		'You go outside with Igor. In a bout of passion, Igor takes you by the hand and says: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re such a pretty girl. Everytime I see you, my mood gets better, even when I''m feeling down. I like you very much, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I''d really like to start a relationship with you."'
+		'You go outside with Igor. In a bout of passion, Igor takes you by the hand and looks you in the eyes. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re such a pretty girl. Everytime I see you, my mood gets better, even when I''m feeling down. I like you very much <<$pcs_nickname>>, and I''d really like to start a relationship with you."'
 
-		act 'Refuse him and leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
+		act 'Refuse and leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 
-		act 'Agree - He''s kinda cute':
+		act 'Agree':
 			*clr & cla
 			IgorLoverQW = 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big4.jpg"></center>'
-			'You agreed to go out with Igor. A smile blossoms on his face and he hugs you tightly. "I''m so happy, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Now that we''re a couple... can we kiss?"'
-			'Something about the eagerness with which he suggests this makes you think he''s never kissed a girl before. And without waiting for your answer, he''s already leaning in to kiss you...'
+			'You agree to date Igor and a smile blossoms on his face as he hugs you tightly. "I''m so happy, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Now that we''re a couple... Can we kiss?"'
+			'Something about the eagerness with which he suggests this makes you think he''s never kissed a girl before. Without waiting for your answer, he''s already leaning in to kiss you...'
 			gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'force', 'medium'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-				act 'Stop him - If you go out with him, it''ll be on your terms (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+				act 'Stop him (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'force'
 					IgorDominaQW = 1
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big4.jpg"></center>'
-					'You tell Igor that you''re not gonna give away kisses like that, and even though you''re grinning, your demeanor is unmistakeably dominant. So much so that Igor blushes and kneels before you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I beg you, on my knees, just one kiss! I''ll do anything for you - I''ll be your willing slave."'
-					'Even though you expected him to be put off by your refusal and dominance, Igor seems... happy that you are taking charge and not just letting him do as he pleases. It''s almost as if he wants to be dominated. But do you really want to dominate a guy?'
+					'You tell Igor that you''re not going to give away kisses like that, and even though you''re grinning, your demeanor is unmistakeably dominant. So much so that Igor blushes and kneels before you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I beg you, on my knees, just one kiss! I''ll do anything for you - I''ll be your willing slave."'
+					'Even though you expected him to be put off by your refusal and dominance, Igor seems... happy that you''re taking charge and not just letting him do as he pleases. It''s almost as if he wants to be dominated. But do you really want to dominate a guy?'
 					gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'force', 'medium'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-						act 'Yes, you do - "You may kiss my feet" (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+						act 'Yes (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 							*clr & cla
 							gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'force'
 							IgorLove += 20
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/igor/leg.jpg"></center>'
-							'You smile at Igor, kneeling at your feet, right here in public, and tell him that he may kiss your foot. Igor scrambles to the task with more enthusiasm than you thought possible: In no time at all, he is kissing your naked foot, caressing it with reverence and licking your toes, his tongue tickling you. He''s hunched over, leaning on one elbow, and at first you don''t understand why but simply enjoy this strange foot massage. It''s not until he groans and you see a tiny jet of sperm hit the pavement that you realize Igor had been masturbating to your feet - literally - right here in front of you while he kissed and caressed your toes.'
+							'You smile at Igor, kneeling at your feet, right here in public, and tell him that he may kiss your foot. Igor scrambles to perform the task with more enthusiasm than you thought possible. In no time at all, he''s kissing your naked foot, caressing it with reverence and licking your toes, his tongue tickling you.' 
+							'He''s hunched over, leaning on one elbow. At first, you don''t understand why but simply enjoy this strange foot massage. It''s not until he groans and you see a tiny jet of sperm hit the pavement that you realize Igor had been masturbating to your feet - literally - right here in front of you while he kissed and caressed your toes.'
 							'As weird of a scene as that was, it feels oddly empowering that he could get off like that within the confines of what you allowed him to do. Even stranger is how he''s thanking you profusely.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5, 'dom', 'feet'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
-							act 'That was unexpected - Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
+							act 'That was unexpected':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 						end
 					else
-						act 'Yes, you do - "You may kiss my feet" (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+						act 'Yes (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 					end	
-					act 'Well, let''s not overdo it - Kiss him':
+					act 'Let''s not overdo it':
 						*clr & cla
 						IgorLove += 10
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/kiss/kiss.jpg"></center>'
 						'You tell Igor to get back on his feet and, meeting his eyes, kiss him. He responds with passion. It seems that your dominance has aroused him a little.'
-
 						gs 'arousal', 'kiss_give', 5, 'dom'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
 		
-						act 'Enough for now - Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
+						act 'Enough for now':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					end
 				end
 			else
-				act 'Stop him - If you go out with him, it''ll be on your terms (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+				act 'Stop him (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 			end	
 			act 'Let Igor kiss you':
 				*clr & cla
 				IgorLove += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/kiss/kiss.jpg"></center>'
-				'You give in and give Igor a gentle kiss. He gives you a smile afterwards but almost seems a little disappointed. By what, you cannot tell.'
+				'You give in and give Igor a gentle kiss. He gives you a smile afterwards but almost seems a little disappointed, although you can''t tell why.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
-				act 'Enough of this - Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
+				act 'Enough of this':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -528,7 +516,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia':
 	gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A25', 'like'
 	minut +30
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/disco/disco1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk back to Sonia''s house. she seems to be in a pretty good mood, chatting about a variety of subjects while you hold hands. Once at her home, she unlocks the door. "Be quiet. My mom is asleep." The two of you sneak to her room before hopping on the bed and quickly stripping down to your underwear.'
+	'You walk back to Sonia''s house. She seems to be in a pretty good mood, chatting about a variety of subjects while you hold hands. Once at her home, she unlocks the door. "Be quiet. My mom is asleep." The two of you sneak to her room before hopping on the bed and quickly stripping down to your underwear.'
 	act 'Kiss':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/disco/disco2.jpg"></center>'