Files cleaned up. Will be expanded in future.

locations/Peterroom.qsrc

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start_door':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'themes', 'indoors'
-	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Apartment Peter</font></b></center>'
+	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Peter''s Apartment</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/peterdoor.jpg"></center>'
 
 	act 'Leave':
@@ -25,12 +25,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start_door':
 
 		if petersexday < 1:
 			petersexday += 1
-			'Peter opens the door.'
-			'Come in and get changed.'
+			'You ring the doorbell and wait. After a few seconds, Peter opens the door and smiles. "Come in and get changed."'
 
 			act 'Enter the apartment':gt 'peterroom', 'start'
 		else
-			'You ring the doorbell, but no one answers.'
+			'You ring the doorbell a few times, but no one answers.'
 
 			act 'Leave':
 				cla
@@ -50,9 +49,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if peter > 0 :
 		peterrand = rand(1, 2)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/9.jpg"></center>'
-		'You get undressed and fix your collar around your neck. You hear Peter in the next room. "Who''s my whore?"'
+		'You get undressed and fasten your collar around your neck.'
+		'"Who''s my good bitch?" you hear Peter ask from the next room.'
 
-		act 'I am, Master.':
+		act 'I am, Master':
 			petersex = petersex + 1
 
 			if analplugin = 1 :gt 'peterroom', 'klap'
@@ -63,16 +63,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		petersexday += 1
 		minut += 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you start to undress, Peter walks into the room, a multi-tailed whip in one hand and a collar in the other.'
+		'As you start to undress, Peter walks into the room with a multi-tailed whip in one hand and a collar in the other.'
 		'He puts the collar down in front of you. It''s a broad strip of leather with a ring at the front where a leash can be attached.'
 
-		act 'Put it on' :
+		act 'Put it on':
 			*clr
 			cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/2.jpg"></center>'
 			'You eagerly put the collar on and Peter strokes you gently on the cheek, but then suddenly pulls his hand back and slaps you.'
 			'"Lustful girl! Stand up and turn around - hands behind your back!"'
-			'You do as he says and feel leather cuffs being fastened around your wrists.'
+			'You do as he says and feel leather cuffs being tightly fastened around your wrists.'
 
 			if analplugin = 1 :
 				analplugin = 0
@@ -84,23 +84,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				*clr
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/3.jpg"></center>'
-				'Peter pulls you by the collar, then shoves you to your knees in front of him. "Come on bitch, open your mouth." he orders.'
+				'Peter pulls you by the collar and forces you onto your knees in front of him. "Open your mouth, bitch!" he sternly orders.'
 
 				act 'Please him':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/4.jpg"></center>'
-					'Peter unbuttons his pants and pulls out his 25cm cock. He grabs you by the hair and shoves the head in your mouth. You obediently wrap your lips around it, then begin to suck and caress it with your tongue, feeling it grow and strain inside your mouth.'
+					'Peter unbuttons his pants and pulls out his cock before grabbing you by the hair and shoving it into your mouth. You obediently wrap your lips around it and start sucking it, feeling it grow and strain inside your mouth.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 					gs 'stat'
 					
-					act 'Continue' :
+					act 'Continue':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Peter pushes you onto the bed and presses your legs up to your chest before binding your hand cuffs behind them.'
-						'With some impatience, he climbs onto the bed and thrusts his member into your pussy, fucking you like a mindless doll. After a few minutes, he stops and pulls his cock out of you, unties you and then shoves you to the floor.'
-						'He walks across the room, turns and says, "Crawl to me, bitch!"'
+						'After a few minutes, Peter slides his dick out of your mouth, pulls you to your feet and pushes you onto the bed. He pushes your legs up to your chest before binding your hand cuffs behind them.'
+						'He climbs onto the bed and thrusts his dick into your pussy before he starts fucking you hard and fast. After a few minutes, he stops and pulls out, unties you and shoves you to the floor.'
+						'He walks across the room before turning back to you. "Crawl to me, bitch!"'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub'
 						gs 'stat'
 					
@@ -116,9 +116,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/4_1.jpg"></center>'
-						'"You need to be punished!" Peter rounds the table and forces you on your knees with your ass high in the air. You squeal when he shoves a butt plug deep into your ass, but it gets worse. He reaches for his whip, and starts flogging your ass, alternating cheeks. He counts the strikes aloud, ignoring your sobs as the leather tails burn across your raw ass.'
-						'"Beg me to fuck you, whore!"'
-						'Please fuck me, Master! Please! Fuck me like the dirty little whore I am!'
+						'You remain where you are and refuse to move. Peter scowls with disappointment.'
+						'"A disobidient bitch like you needs to be punished!" he says as he rounds the table and forces you onto your knees and pulling your ass high in the air. You squeal when he shoves a butt plug deep into your ass, but it gets worse. He reaches for his whip and starts flogging your ass. He counts the strikes aloud, ignoring your sobs as the leather tails burn across your raw, stinging ass.'
+						'"Beg me to fuck you, whore!" he snarls as he whips you extra hard.'
+						'"Please fuck me, Master! Fuck me like the dirty little whore I am!" you beg through your tears and you see a faint smile on his face.'
 						act 'Continue' :gt 'peterroom', 'klap'
 					end
 				else
@@ -136,26 +137,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'klap':
 	*clr
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/6.jpg"></center>'
-	'Peter puts you on a leash and leads you into the bedroom. He pushes you onto the huge bed and ties your hands and feet to the headboard, before fastening a ball gag into your mouth.'
-	'"I love it when you moan, <<$pcs_nickname>>, but when you''re allowed to talk, you start spouting nonsense. So I think you''re better off gagged.'
+	'Peter puts you on a leash and leads you into the bedroom. He pushes you onto the bed and ties your hands and feet to the headboard before fastening a ball gag into your mouth.'
+	'"I love it when you moan <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I think you''re better off gagged."'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub', 'bound'
 	gs 'stat'
-					
+	
 	act 'Moan':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/7.jpg"></center>'
-		'Peter spreads your legs and bears down on you from above. "Let''s see how well your sweet ass opens for me," he says'
+		'Your moans are muffled by the gag as Peter bears down on you from above. "Let''s see how well your sweet ass takes me..." he says'
 
 		if analplugin = 1 :
 			analplugin = 0
 			', pulls out your butt plug'
 		end
 
-		', and positions his huge erection against your asshole, half-entering with the first thrust. You gasp in pain, moaning into the gag. You can''t wait for him to bury himself in your ass completely. Peter sees your reaction and begins to fuck your ass, penetrating deeper with each stroke, until his dick is completely buried inside you and his balls slap hard against your buttocks. He fucks you so hard that your knees start to shake, and pussy juices trickle down your ass.'
+		'and starts pushing his dick against your asshole. After a few seconds, the tip pops into you and you moan into the gag. You can''t wait for him to bury himself in your ass completely. Peter sees your reaction and begins to fuck your ass, penetrating deeper with each stroke, until his dick is completely buried inside you and his balls slap hard against your buttocks. He fucks you so hard that your knees start to shake, and pussy juices trickle down your ass.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
-					
+
 		act 'Moan again':
 			cla & *clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/sex/8.jpg"></center>'
@@ -184,24 +185,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	minut += 30
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/vanroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'"You were great." Peter says, smacking you on the ass. After a few minutes, he picks you up and carries you to the bathroom, where you take a bath together.'
-
-	act 'Leave' :
+	'"You were great." Peter says as he smacks your ass. He then picks you up and carries you to the bathroom, where you take a bath together.'
+    'He greatly enjoys "washing" you, his hands paying special attention to your breasts and pussy as you lean back and make out with him.'
+	act 'Leave':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		peter += 1
 		minut += 20
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/mash.jpg"></center>'
-		'Leaving his apartment, Peter grabs his keys, planning to head out too. You walk down to the yard together, and when you reach his car, Peter leans in to kiss you on the lips.'
-		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you really brighten up my lonely existence. Your appearance is like a light in the dark - a breath of fresh air." He smiles, stroking your cheek. "I need to leave for now, but I hope I can see you against soon."'
-		'Peter slides into his car and starts the engine, but just as he''s about to drive off, he suddenly calls to you. "Forgive my rudeness, but do you need a lift somewhere?"'
-			
+		'You relax in the bath together for a while until Peter states that he has business to attend to. You climb out of the bath and dry off before getting dressed. Peter grabs his keys and locks up before you walk outside together. When you reach his car, Peter leans in to kiss you.'
+		'"You''re a breath of fresh air, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You never fail to brighten my day." he says while gently stroking your cheek. "I hope I can see you against soon."'
+		'He climbs into his car and starts the engine, but just as he''s about to drive off, he suddenly calls to you. "Do you need a lift?"'
+	
 		act 'To the city center':
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
+			'You nod and get into the car next to him. "Just into the city center is fine, thanks."'
+            'You spend the journey talking about the sex you just had and you reach the city center a few minutes later. Peter leans over and gives your ass a firm squeeze as you climb out of the car. "Until next time <<$pcs_nickname>>." You smile at him and close the door before he drives off.' 			
 			gt 'city_center'
 		end
+		if home_owned[1] = 1 or home_owned[1] = 2:
 		act 'To your apartment':
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
+			'You nod and get into the car next to him, giving him directions to your apartment complex.'
+            'You spend the journey talking about the sex you just had and you eventually reach your apartment building. Peter leans over and gives your ass a firm squeeze as you climb out of the car. "Until next time <<$pcs_nickname>>." You smile at him and close the door before he drives off.' 
 			gt 'city_residential'
 		end
 	end
@@ -212,7 +218,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'd1':
 	*clr
 	if pcs_ass < 25:pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/d1-1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Peter binds your torso and hands, then lifts you up by the hips, hanging your bound form from a hook.'
+	'Peter binds your torso and hands before he lifts you up and hangs you from a hook.'
 	
 	act 'Suck his fingers':
 		cla
@@ -264,7 +270,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'd2':
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
-		
+
 	act 'Suck':
 		cla
 		*clr

locations/sexshop.qsrc

@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'Strap-on harness - starting at 1,200 <b>₽</b>'
 	'Butt plug - 1,200 <b>₽</b>'
 	*nl
-	'In the basement are the private booths for viewing porn movies (50 <b>₽</b> 15 minutes).'
+	'Private booths are available in the basement for viewing porn. (50 <b>₽</b> for 15 minutes)'
 
 	act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 
@@ -35,14 +35,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		if rand(0,1) = 1:
 			'You see an interesting looking middle-aged man. Apparently, he is the owner of this store.'
 
-			act 'Introduce yourself to the owner of the store' :
+			act 'Introduce yourself':
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/peter.jpg"></center>'
-				'"I''m Peter, I''ve been watching you for a long time. I often see you here. I find you rather interesting..."'
-
-				act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
-				act 'Go with Peter': gt 'Peterroom', 'start'
+				'You approach the counter and introduce yourself. "Hey there, I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+				'"I''m Peter," he replies. "I''ve been watching you for a while and I find you rather...interesting. Do you want to come back to my place for some ''fun''?"'
+                act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
+				act 'Go with him': gt 'Peterroom', 'start'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -50,65 +50,64 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	act 'Go to the basement':gt 'sexshop', 'podval'
 
 	if gloryhole >= 20 and pornstudio = 0:
-		'You notice, out of the corner of your eye, that the seller is trying to get your attention.'
+		'You notice the salesman trying to get your attention.'
 
-		act 'Approach to learn what he wants':
+		act 'Approach':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			menu_off = 1
-			'In general, you give a great blowjob. Everyone knows that. Do you want to earn extra money in the porn business as an actress? The pay there is certainly better than here. And the cocks. Well? Other offers won''t be as good!'
+			'"You give a great blowjob, so why not put that mouth to use and work as a porn actress? The pay is certainly better than here."'
 
 			act 'Agree':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/pierre_1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You head to the studio with Peter, looking around at the others there.'
-				'You are approached by a young man, who Peter introduces to you. You are greeted by him.'
-
+				'You head to the porn studio with the man, where you''re approached by a man who introduces himself as Dimitri.'
+                '"Okay, I''ve got to get back to work, but Dimitri here is our manager. He can explain everything you need to know." the salesman says before disappearing.'
 				act 'Explain the purpose of your visit':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut = minut + 60
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/pierre_2.jpg"></center>'
-					'Peter smiles and says, "New actresses are always welcome. However in this business, many women do not take well to the work. You will have to do an audition, and if you do well, you can have the job."'
-					'"I''ll tell you about the work here and now, but under one condition - you have to undress".'
+					'Dimitri smiles. "New actresses are always welcome, but if they''re terrible, the studio won''t take them. The auditions are made public, so remember that if you ever consider it."'
+		            '"I''ll tell you everything else under one condition - you have to undress."'
 
 					act 'Undress':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/casting_3.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Good, good. Well, first there is a casting call for actresses. As I said, if you don''t take well to the work, your only hope will be a beautiful appearance."'
+						'You strip out of your clothes. Once you''re nude, Dimitri smiles and starts his tour.'
+			            '"We start with the casting auditions. As I said, if you''re terrible, then you have no hope. This can be overlooked if you have an attractive appearance, however."'
 
-						act '...':
+						act 'Continue':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/model_0.jpg"></center>'
-							'"Then, we select the lead role."'
-							'"For the lead role, you must be the most beautiful girl."'
+							'"Then a girl is chosen for the lead role. Only the most attractive of girls are chosen."'
 
-							act '...':
+							act 'Continue':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/film_0.jpg"></center>'
-								'"And then comes the filming itself, which is the most exciting and fun part."'
-								'"And after the filming, we create a video to sell for profit!"'
+								'"Then she shoots the scenes, an interesting and exciting process that can take hours. The films we shoot...'
 
-								act '...':
+								act 'Continue':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/dvd-disx.jpg"></center>'
-									'"This is what makes us the money."'
+									'He pulls a DVD off the top of a nearby stack. "Are how we make money."'
 
-									act 'You understand, but how and where do they sell the videos? Maybe you want to see one for yourself...':
+									act 'How and where is it all sold?':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/pierre_2.jpg"></center>'
-										'"Well, we have the sauna which is in the residential area. We have one man there. And also the sex shop, of course. We''re thinking about selling them at the university as well. If we had some help to get connections there, profits would be increased. And whoever helps would get a bonus for being an assistant, of course."'
+										'"We mostly sell it digitally on our premium websites, but we have guys at the sauna in the residential area and in the sex shop for those who want to buy physically.' 
+										'We''re thinking of moving in on the university as well- and not just selling our films there. We could possibly shoot a few films on campus. There''s a huge market for young college students and we want a slice."'
 
-										act '"Are there any problems with the law?"':
+										act 'Is that legal?':
 											*clr & cla
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/ment_0.jpg"></center>'
-											'"We''ve got contracts with the police to leave us alone. Maybe in the future you will be able to help us to keep those in place, or improve them. But for now, you would only be able to work on the weekend."'
+											'"It doesn''t matter since we bribe the cops. Maybe in the future you''ll be able to help us with that? In the meantime, I''ve told you everything you need to know."'
 
-											act 'You understand.':
+											act 'You understand':
 												*clr & cla
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/pierre_2.jpg"></center>'
-												'"Alright, girl. Enjoy yourself."'
+												'"Enjoy yourself. I hope to see you around here more often." he says before returning to his business.'
 												pornstudio = 3
 												act 'Continue': gt 'pornstudio', 'start'
 											end
@@ -126,7 +125,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 					gs 'stat'
-					pornstudio = 1	
+					pornstudio = 1
+                    'You shake your head and quickly move away from the man, feeling his gaze on the back of your head the entire time.'					
 					gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 				end
 			else
@@ -143,7 +143,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	act 'Look through the fetish shoes': minut += 1 & gt 'sexshop', 'shoes'
 	
 	if money < 145 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 145:
-		'You cannot afford lubricant.'
+		'You can''t afford lubricant.'
 	else
 		if money >= 145:
 			act 'Buy lubricant 145 <b>₽</b> (cash)':
@@ -176,7 +176,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 	
 	if pornMagazine <= 1 and (money < 400 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 400):
-		'You cannot afford the porn magazine.'
+		'You can''t afford the porn magazine.'
 	else
 		if pornMagazine <= 1 and money >= 400:
 			act 'Buy a porn magazine 400 <b>₽</b> (cash)':
@@ -207,7 +207,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if dildo = 0 and (money < 800 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 800):
-		'You cannot afford the 10cm dildo.'
+		'You can''t afford the 10cm dildo.'
 	else
 		if money >= 800 and dildo = 0:
 			act 'Buy 10cm dildo 800 <b>₽</b> (cash)':
@@ -240,7 +240,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if middildo = 0 and (money < 850 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 850):
-		'You cannot afford the 15cm dildo.'
+		'You can''t afford the 15cm dildo.'
 	else
 		if money >= 850 and middildo = 0:
 			act 'Buy 15cm long dildo 850 <b>₽</b> (cash)':
@@ -273,7 +273,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if largedildo = 0 and (money < 900 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 900):
-		'You cannot afford the 20cm dildo.'
+		'You can''t afford the 20cm dildo.'
 	else
 		if money >= 900 and largedildo = 0:
 			act 'Buy 20cm long dildo 900 <b>₽</b> (cash)':
@@ -314,7 +314,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			pcs_horny += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/15cm.jpg"></center>'
 			if  pcs_inhib < 35:
-				'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+				'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it as your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 			else
 				'You buy the dildo and calmly hide it.'
 			end
@@ -329,7 +329,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			pcs_horny += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/15cm.jpg"></center>'
 			if  pcs_inhib < 35:
-				'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+				'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it as your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 			else
 				'You buy the dildo and calmly hide it.'
 			end
@@ -346,7 +346,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			pcs_horny += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/15cm.jpg"></center>'
 			if  pcs_inhib < 35:
-				'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+				'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it as your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 			else
 				'You buy the dildo and calmly hide it.'
 			end
@@ -361,7 +361,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			pcs_horny += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/15cm.jpg"></center>'
 			if  pcs_inhib < 35:
-				'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+				'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it as your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 			else
 				'You buy the dildo and calmly hide it.'
 			end
@@ -370,7 +370,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if bigdildo = 0 and (money < 950 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 950):
-		'You cannot afford the 25cm dildo.'
+		'You can''t afford the 25cm dildo.'
 	else
 		if money >= 950 and bigdildo = 0:
 			act 'Buy 25cm long dildo 950 <b>₽</b> (cash)':
@@ -403,7 +403,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if extradildo = 0 and (money < 800 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 800):
-		'You cannot afford the 30cm dildo.'
+		'You can''t afford the 30cm dildo.'
 	else
 		if money >= 1000 and extradildo = 0:
 			act 'Buy 30cm long dildo (1,000 <b>₽</b>)':
@@ -436,7 +436,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if superdildo = 0 and (money < 800 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 800):
-		'You cannot afford the 35cm dildo.'
+		'You can''t afford the 35cm dildo.'
 	else
 		if money >= 1100 and superdildo = 0:
 			act 'Buy 35cm long dildo (1,100 <b>₽</b>)':
@@ -469,7 +469,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if maddildo = 0 and (money < 800 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 800):
-		'You cannot afford the 40cm dildo.'
+		'You can''t afford the 40cm dildo.'
 	else
 		if money >= 1200 and maddildo = 0:
 			act 'Buy 40cm long dildo (1,200 <b>₽</b>)':
@@ -502,7 +502,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if vibrator = 0 and (money < 800 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 800):
-		'You cannot afford the vibrator.'
+		'You can''t afford the vibrator.'
 	else
 		if money >= 800 and vibrator = 0:
 			act 'Buy vibrator (800 <b>₽</b>)':
@@ -536,7 +536,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	if strapon = 0:
 		if (money > 1200 and karta + bankDebtLimit > 1200) and (dildo + middildo + largedildo + bigdildo + extradildo + superdildo + maddildo = 0):
-			'You cannot afford the strap-on.'
+			'You can''t afford the strap-on.'
 			if money >= 1200:
 				act 'Buy a strap-on with a 15cm dildo 1,200 <b>₽</b> (cash)':
 					*clr & cla
@@ -602,7 +602,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if analplug = 0 and (money < 800 and karta + bankDebtLimit < 800):
-		'You cannot afford the butt plug.'
+		'You can''t afford the butt plug.'
 	else
 		if money >= 800 and analplug = 0:
 			act 'Buy butt plug 800 <b>₽</b> (cash)':
@@ -892,9 +892,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 
-	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Booth movies</font></b></center>'
+	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Movie Booth</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/gloryhole/ghbooths.jpg"></center>'
-	'A small cabinet with a TV on the wall, terminal and two holes in the walls at waist level.'
+	'The small booth has a TV on the wall, a terminal to choose films and a chair to sit in. There is also two holes in the walls at waist level.'
 	if mistressqwest > 0 and mistressqwest <= 20:
 		GHchance = rand(6,10)
 		ghnowcheck = ghnow		
@@ -905,31 +905,31 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 	
 	if ghnow > 0:'You served <<ghnow>> cocks.'
 
-	act 'Get out of the booth':gt 'sexshop', 'podval'
+	act 'Leave the booth':gt 'sexshop', 'podval'
 
 	if money >= 50 and (hour >= 11 or hour < 3):
-		act 'Stick 50 <b>₽</b> in the machine':
+		act 'Watch porn':
 			cla
 			money -= 50
 			minut += 15
-			'Once you pay the money, the TV on the wall begins showing porn movies.'
-			'You sit in a chair and watch the porn. You begin to get a little excited.'
+			'You insert 50 <b>₽</b> into the terminal and the TV on the wall begins showing a pornographic film.'
+			'You sit in the chair and watch the porn, feeling yourself becoming a little excited.'
 
-			act 'The movie ends':gt 'sexshop', 'pip'
+			act 'The film ends':gt 'sexshop', 'pip'
 
 			act 'Masturbate':
 				cla
-				'You caress your pussy with your fingers and enjoy the pleasant sensation between your legs.'
+				'You caress your pussy as you watch the film, enjoying the pleasant sensation between your legs.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'	
 
-				act 'The movie ends':gt 'sexshop', 'pip'
+				act 'The film ends':gt 'sexshop', 'pip'
 			end
 
 			
 			if GHchance >= 10 - ghnowcheck:
-				'You hear the TV turn on in the next stall.'
+				'You hear the TV in the next stall turn on.'
 
 				act 'Stick a finger in the hole (serve a stranger)':
 					cla
@@ -940,13 +940,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 					else
 						money += 150
 					end
-					fingerRand = rand(1, 5)
-					! WD: Rename missing Image ~  'ghFinger.jpg' to 'ghFinger5.jpg'
-					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/gloryhole/ghfinger<<fingerRand>>.jpg"></center>'
-					'You poke your finger in the hole, letting whoever''s on the other side know that you are ready to serve him.'
-					'The stranger slips ' + iif(ghnow < 5, '300', '150') +	'<b>₽</b> into the hole, and then his erect cock pokes out of it.'
+					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/gloryhole/ghfinger<<rand(1,5)>>.jpg"></center>'
+					'You poke your finger in the hole, letting whoever''s on the other side know that you''re ready to serve him.'
+					'The stranger slips ' + iif(ghnow < 5, '300', '150') +	'<b>₽</b> into the hole, followed by his erect cock.'
 
-					act 'Suck dick':
+					act 'Suck his dick':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						gloryhole += 1
@@ -954,8 +952,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 						gs 'dinSex', 'std_trigger_oral'
 						ghprand = rand(1, 38)
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/gloryhole/gloryhole<<ghprand>>.jpg"></center>'
-						'You take the cock in your mouth and start to suck it, blowing him enthusiastically.'
-						'The stranger''s cock begins to throb, and finally, the stranger cums in your mouth, filling it with a huge amount of thick sperm. You swallow it, and once you''ve licked all the sperm from his cock, it disappears back into the hole, and you hear the man leave his booth.'
+						'You take the cock into your mouth and start enthusiastically sucking it.'
+						'After a few minutes, he stranger''s cock begins to throb and he cums in your mouth, filling it with a huge amount of thick cum. You swallow it, and once you''ve licked his cock clean, it disappears back into the hole. You hear the man sighing in satisfaction before he leaves the booth.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'	
@@ -980,14 +978,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 	gs 'stat'
 	if meet_kendra = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend0.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you browse the store, you see Kendra again. She is browsing through some of the sex toys, then she notices you at about the same time.'
-		'After a couple of minutes, she walks over and boldly caresses your hair. "Hello again. You change your mind about serving me?" she asks.'
+		'As you browse the store, you see Kendra again. She''s browsing through some of the sex toys when she notices you.'
+		'After a few minutes, she walks over and boldly caresses your hair. "Hello again. You change your mind about serving me?"'
 		act 'No':
 			*clr & cla
 			kendrano = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend.jpg"></center>'
 			'You smile at her. "Sorry, no. I still don''t belong to anyone."'
-			'She sighs softly. "Such a waste. Oh well, there are plenty of pretty little white Russian bitches that love being owned by an Ebony Mistress. Perhaps we will meet again and you will change your mind. I go to the University on the island, you should stop by sometime." She gives you directions to which dorm building is hers, and which floor and room number is her dorm room. With that, you both say your goodbyes, and she returns to shopping. As do you.'
+			'She sighs softly. "Such a waste. Oh well, there''s plenty of pretty little white Russian bitches that love being owned by an ebony Mistress. Perhaps we''ll meet again and you''ll change your mind. I go to the University, so you should stop by sometime." She gives you directions to her dorm room before she returns to browsing.'
 			act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 			act 'Go back to shopping':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 		end
@@ -995,88 +993,92 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend.jpg"></center>'
 			'You look down a little to show your submission to her. "Yes, Mistress Kendra."'
-			'She smiles at that. "I think you are going to make a great little slave. We are going to have a lot of fun together. Now, follow me to the basement, slave, so you can service me."'
+			'She smiles widely. "I think you''re going to make a great little slave. We''re going to have a lot of fun together. Follow me, slave."'
 			act 'Serve Kendra':
 				*clr & cla
 				kendraslave += 1
 				kendratoy = rand(1,2)
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now, strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you are fully naked. "Good little slave. Now get over here and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. You continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
-				'"Look at me," commands Kendra. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this for my pleasure," she informs you.'
+				'You follow her down into the basement, where she sits on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Strip for me, bitch." You do as you''re told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you''re naked. "Good little slave. Now get over here and worship my pussy." You kneel before her and start eagerly licking her pussy as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
+				'"Look at me!" she commands. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 				gs 'stat'
 				if kendratoy = 1:
-					act 'She pulls out a dildo':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra1'
+					act 'Use the dildo':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra1'
 				else
-					act 'She pulls out a strap-on':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra2'
+					act 'Use the strap-on':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra2'
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	elseif kendraslave >= 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you browse the store, you see Kendra trying on latex clothes. Then she notices you, at about the same time.'
-		'"Who do we have here? My favorite bitch. Come to me, and service me. I just bought a new toy and I am very excited to try it out." Kendra laughs, as she motions for you to follow her into the basement.'
+		'As you browse the store, you see Kendra trying on latex clothes. She smiles when she notices you looking at her.'
+		'"Who do we have here? My favorite bitch. Come and service me. I just bought a new toy and I''m eager to try it out." she laughs as she motions for you to follow her.'
 		gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-			act 'Leave the shop (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+			act 'Leave (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 				gs 'stat'
 				minut += 5
+				'You quickly leave while Kendra can''t stop you.'
 				gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Leave the shop (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Leave (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 		act 'Serve Kendra':
 			*clr & cla
 			kendratoy = rand(1,2)
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you are fully naked. "Good little slave, now get over her and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. You continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
-			'"Look at me," commands Kendra. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this for my pleasure," she informs you.'
+			'You follow her down into the basement, where she sits on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Strip for me, bitch." You do as you''re told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you''re naked. "Good little slave. Now get over here and worship my pussy." You kneel before her and start eagerly licking her pussy as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
+			'"Look at me!" she commands. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 			if kendratoy = 1:
-				act 'She pulls out a dildo':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra1'
+				act 'Use the dildo':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra1'
 			else
-				act 'She pulls out a strap-on':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra2'
+				act 'Use the dildo':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra2'
 			end
 		end
 	elseif hotcat >= 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend0.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you browse the store, you see a very attractive young black woman about your age trying on latex clothes. She notices you at about the same time.'
-		'After a couple of minutes, she walks over and boldly caresses your hair. "You''re a pretty little thing, what''s your name?" she asks.'
-		'You decide to tell her. "My name is <<$pcs_firstname>>, but most people call me <<$pcs_nickname>>. What''s your name?"'
-		'She smiles. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what a pretty name. My name is Kendra, but you can call me Mistress Kendra," she says with confidence.'
-		'"Oh" You reply, so she is one of those.'
+		'As you browse the store, you see a very attractive young black woman trying on latex clothes. She smiles when she notices you looking at her.'
+		'After a few minutes, she walks over and boldly caresses your hair. "You''re a pretty little thing, what''s your name?"'
+		'"<<$pcs_firstname>>, but most people call me <<$pcs_nickname>>. What''s your name?" you reply.'
+		'She smiles. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what a pretty name. I''m Kendra, but you can call me Mistress Kendra," she says with confidence.'
+		'"Oh..." you reply. She''s one of those people.'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 		act 'Go back to shopping':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 		act 'Talk to her':
 			*clr & cla
 			meet_kendra = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend01.jpg"></center>'
-			!! the dialogue here should be different if the player is not attending the school in Pavlovsk
-			'You ask her about her clothes, and soon the two of you are talking. You tell her that you live in Pavlovsk and are in your final year of school. She tells you she is attending the University to get a degree. You find out she is from the Republic of Congo, on a student visa. You talk about a wide range of things for a while. Eventually, she says, "You are very pretty. I love making pretty little Russian bitches into my slaves. Call me Mistress Kendra, <<$pcs_nickname>>, and become mine." Should you call her mistress? You have no doubt where that will lead.'
+			if Storyline = 1 and SchoolAtestat = 0:
+			  'You ask her about her clothes and start talking with her. You tell her that you live in Pavlovsk and are in your final year of school and she replies by saying that she''s a student from the Republic of Congo and is attending the local university on a student visa. You talk about a wide range of subjects for a while before she eventually says "You''re very pretty. I love making pretty little Russian bitches my slaves. Call me Mistress Kendra, <<$pcs_nickname>>, and become mine." Should you call her mistress? You have no doubt where that will lead.'
+			else
+			  'You ask her about her clothes and start talking with her. You tell her a bit about yourself and she replies by saying that she''s a student from the Republic of Congo and is attending the local university on a student visa. You talk about a wide range of subjects for a while before she eventually says "You''re very pretty. I love making pretty little Russian bitches my slaves. Call me Mistress Kendra, <<$pcs_nickname>>, and become mine." Should you call her mistress? You have no doubt where that will lead.'
+			end
 			act 'Call her Kendra':
 				*clr & cla
 				kendrano = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend.jpg"></center>'
 				'You smile at her. "Sorry, but I don''t belong to anyone."'
-				'She sighs softly. "Such a waste. Oh well, there are plenty of pretty little white Russian bitches that love being owned by an Ebony Mistress. Perhaps we will meet again and you will change your mind. I go to the University on the island, you should stop by sometime." She gives you directions to which dorm building is hers, and which floor and room number is her dorm room. With that, you both say your goodbyes, and she returns to shopping. As do you.'
+				'She sighs softly. "Such a waste. Oh well, there''s plenty of pretty little white Russian bitches that love being owned by an ebony Mistress. Perhaps we''ll meet again and you''ll change your mind?" She gives you directions to her dorm room and you both return to shopping.'
 				act 'Go back to shopping':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 			end
 			act 'Call her Mistress Kendra':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend.jpg"></center>'
-				'You look down a little to show your submission to her. "Yes, Mistress Kendra."'
-				'She smiles at that. "I think you are going to make a great little slave. We are going to have a lot of fun together. Now, follow me to the basement slave so you can service me."'
+				'You look down to show your submission to her. "Yes, Mistress Kendra."'
+				'She smiles. "I think you''re going to make a great little slave. We''re going to have a lot of fun together. Now follow me slave."'
 				act 'Serve Kendra':
 					*clr & cla
 					kendraslave += 1
 					kendratoy = rand(1,2)
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you are fully naked. "Good little slave, now get over her and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. You continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
-					'"Look at me," commands Kendra. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this for my pleasure," she informs you.'
+					'You follow her down into the basement, where she sits on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Strip for me, bitch." You do as you''re told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you''re naked. "Good little slave. Now get over here and worship my pussy." You kneel before her and start eagerly licking her pussy as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
+				    '"Look at me!" she commands. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this."'
 					gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 					gs 'stat'
 					if kendratoy = 1:
@@ -1089,8 +1091,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 		end
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend0.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you browse the store, you see a very attractive young black woman about your age trying on latex clothes. She notices you at about the same time.'
-		'She gives you a quick once over, and then stops paying attention to you. After a few moments, she moves to another section of the store.'
+		'As you browse the store, you see a very attractive young black woman trying on latex clothes. She notices you and gives you a quick once over before she goes back to what she was doing. After a few minutes, she moves to another section of the store.'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 		act 'Go back to shopping':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 	end
@@ -1103,27 +1104,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra1':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take the dildo from Kendra and insert it into her pussy. While you use one hand to fuck her with the dildo, your other hand caresses her clit, trying to bring her to orgasm. Kendra moans and writhes, sitting on the table, enjoying your efforts.'
+	'You take the dildo from Kendra and insert it into her pussy. You use one hand to fuck her with the dildo while the other caresses her clit. Kendra moans and writhes in pleasure as she leans back on the table.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You dutifully continue to thrust the dildo, still stroking her clit. Her juices begin dripping from the dildo onto your hand. "That''s right, slave, that''s it. Just keep doing that!" she commands you.'
+		'You dutifully continue to thrust the dildo in and out of her while stroking her clit. Her juices begin dripping from the dildo onto your hand. "That''s right, slave. Just keep doing that!" she commands.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend4.jpg"></center>'
-			'Then Kendra starts spasming, as her whole body orgasms. Her pussy begins to squirt as she orgasms, covering your hand and her thighs. Some of it even ends up on your breasts and stomach before her orgasm subsides. Kendra looks at you. "You are my beautiful little white slave bitch, totally committed to serving me. Now lick me clean," she orders.'
+			'A few seconds later, she starts spasming as her whole body is overwhelmed by her orgasm. Her pussy squirts juices, covering your hand and her thighs. Some of it even ends up on your breasts and stomach, Once her orgasm subsides, Kendra looks at you. "You''re my beautiful little white bitch, totally committed to serving me. Now lick me clean!" she orders.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Lick':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend5.jpg"></center>'
 				'You pull the dildo out of her soaking wet pussy and dutifully move your head between her legs to begin slowly licking the juices from her thighs and pussy.'
-				'"Keep going, you slut," Kendra orders you. You began to lick faster, licking her thighs and pussy completely clean of her juices.'
-				'"Now, it''s time for your reward," she says as she pulls a strap-on out of her bag next.'
+				'"Keep going, you slut!" she barks and you begin to lick faster, licking her thighs and pussy completely clean of her juices.'
+				'"Now it''s time for your reward," she says as she pulls a strap-on out of her bag.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Yes, Mistress':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra2'
@@ -1139,22 +1140,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra2':
 	minut += 3
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend8.jpg"></center>'
-	*p 'Kendra steps into the harness and slides it up over her hips. As she does, she starts pulling the straps tight to hold the strap-on firmly in place. With the strap-on harness now securely in place, she pulls you close and kisses you. One of her hands wanders down to your pussy and rubs it for a moment, and then she slides one finger inside of you. She breaks the kiss before saying, '
+	*p 'Kendra steps into the harness and slides it up over her hips before pulling the straps tight to hold it firmly in place. She then pulls you in close and kisses you as her fingers slide down to your pussy and start rubbing it before she slides one finger inside you. She breaks the kiss a few seconds later.'
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
-		'"I see you are still a virgin, well, I won''t pop your cherry. Luckily, you still have other holes I can fuck. Now, on your knees and suck my cock."'
+		'"I see you''re still a virgin, so I won''t pop your cherry. Luckily, you have other holes I can fuck. Now get on your knees and suck my cock!"'
 	else
-		'"I see you are already nice and wet, slave. Eager for my cock, are you? Don''t worry, you will feel it soon enough. Now, on your knees and suck my cock."'
+		'"I see you''re already wet, slave. Eager for my cock, are you? Don''t worry, you''ll feel it soon enough. Now get on your knees and suck it first!"'
 	end
 	act 'Suck her strap-on':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend7.jpg"></center>'
-		'You kneel down and take ahold of the strap-on dildo with one hand while wrapping your lips around it. You stroke the dildo while you suck on it at the same time. For several minutes, you suck the dildo, getting it nice and wet with your saliva.'
+		'You kneel down and take hold of the dildo with one hand while wrapping your lips around it. You stroke the dildo while sucking it for the next few minutes.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Deep throat':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend7.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you suck on the dildo, you feel Kendra grab you by the hair. Next thing you know, she forces your head forward, forcing the dildo down your throat. Your lips comes to rest against the fake balls. After a few moments of gagging, she lets you pull back to get a breath through your nose - only for her to force it down your throat again, over and over, as she fucks your throat.'
+			'You suddenly feel Kendra grab you by the hair before she pushes your head forwards, forcing the dildo down your throat. After making you gag for a few seconds, she lets you pull back to get a breath through your nose - only for her to force it down your throat again as she starts roughly fucking your mouth.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 			gs 'stat'
 			if pcs_vag = 0:
@@ -1172,14 +1173,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendravag':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend10.jpg"></center>'
-	'Kendra commands you, "Impale your pussy on my cock and fuck yourself until I tell you to stop." Once Kendra sits in a chair, you straddle her strap-on, lowering yourself and sliding it into your pussy. You ride the strap-on, and Kendra drives up from under you - trying to shove it as deep into your pussy as possible. Several minutes pass, and each thrust increases your arousal. You decide to rub your clit to increase the amount of pleasure you are receiving.'
+	'"Ride my cock now, slave!" Kendra commands as she sits in a chair. You straddle her and lower yourself, moaning as the dildo slides into your pussy. You start riding the strap-on as Kendra drives it up from under you, trying to shove it as deep into your pussy as possible. Several minutes pass, and each thrust increases your arousal.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Rub clit':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend12.jpg"></center>'
-		'You start rubbing your clit as you ride her strap-on, making it feel even better. Just as you feel like you are getting close to an orgasm, Kendra pushes you off her. You feel the dildo slide out of your pussy. "Now I am going to wreck your little ass!" she tells you.'
+		'You start rubbing your clit as you ride her strap-on, but just as you''re getting close to an orgasm, Kendra pushes you off of her. "I''m going to wreck your little ass now!"'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 		gs 'arousal', 'mast', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 		minut -= 5
@@ -1195,18 +1196,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 	gs 'boyStat', 'D4'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend9.jpg"></center>'
-	'You stand up, as does she. "Lie on the table," she commands you. You jump up onto the table and spread your legs. Kendra steps up between your legs and gently slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> strap-on, slick with your pussy juices, into your asshole. She stops a moment to give your ass time to adjust to the size. Then, she begins to thrust the strap-on up your butt, causing you to moan. Seeing that you are enjoying the process, Kendra begins to slowly accelerate. "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave!" she commands you. You know it likely means she will just fuck you harder if you refuse to submit, but maybe deep down that''s what you really want...'
+	'You both stand up and she commands you to get on the table. You jump up onto the table and spread your legs and she steps between them before gently sliding the dildo, slick with your pussy juices, into your asshole. She stops to let you adjust before she starts to thrust, causing you to moan. Seeing that you''re enjoying it, she starts to go faster. "Tell me your ass belongs to me, slave!"'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Submit':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend13.jpg"></center>'
-		'You submit to her command, telling her, "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
-		'She smiles at you as she continues fucking your ass. "That''s right, Slave. And what can I do with it?" she asks.'
-		'You reply to her. "Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!"'
-		'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands.'
-		'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
+		'You submit to her command. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
+		'She smiles at you as she continues fucking your ass. "That''s right, slave. And what can I do with it?"'
+		'"Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!" you submissively reply.'
+		'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch! Your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!"'
+		'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass for a few more minutes, as if to make her point, before she pulls out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Finish': gt 'sexshop', 'kendrafinish'
@@ -1218,19 +1219,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend13.jpg"></center>'
-			'You decide not to tell her what she wants to hear. "It''s my butt, Mistress Kendra, I just let you fuck it sometimes!" you tell her.'
-			'Just as you expected, she starts fucking you harder and faster. "You will learn your place, Slave! You will submit to me, or I will fuck your ass raw," she explains, and for several minutes she just fucks your butt, before ordering you once again, "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave!" You know she will just fuck you harder until you submit, but maybe deep down that''s what you really want...'
+			'You decide not to tell her what she wants to hear. "It''s my ass! I just <i>let</i> you fuck it sometimes!" you reply in defiance.'
+			'Just as you expected, she starts fucking you harder and faster. "You''ll learn your place, slave! You will submit to me, or I will fuck your ass raw!" she barks and spends several minutes hammering your ass before asking again. "Tell me your ass belongs to me, slave!"'
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Submit':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend6.jpg"></center>'
-				'You submit to her command, telling her what she wants to hear before she fucks your asshole raw. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
-				'She smiles at you, pushing your legs together as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, Slave. And what can I do with it?" she asks.'
-				'You reply to her. "Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!"'
-				'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands.'
-				'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
+				'You give in and submit to her command. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
+				'She smiles at you, pushing your legs together as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, slave. And what can I do with it?"'
+				'"Anything you want, Mistress Kendra! I belong to you!" you submissively reply.'
+				'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch! Your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!"'
+				'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass for a few more minutes, as if to make her point, before she pulls out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finish': gt 'sexshop', 'kendrafinish'
@@ -1242,19 +1243,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend6.jpg"></center>'
-					'You decide to resist again. "No, Mistress Kendra! This is my ass, and I decide who fucks it!" You tell her.'
-					'She starts fucking you even harder and even faster than before. She pushes your legs close so she can get a better grip on your hips. "Learn your damn place, Slave! You belong to me! You will submit to me now, or else no matter what you say, I will fuck your ass raw right now!" she shouts, and for several minutes, she pounds into your asshole, commanding you once again, "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave! Now!" You know she will just fuck you harder until you submit. You doubt you can last until she gets tired. Eventually, your asshole will start to get sore, and it will start really hurting. And not in the good way it is now.'
+					'You continue to defiantly resist. "This is my ass, and I decide who fucks it!"'
+					'She starts fucking you even harder, pushing your legs closed so she can get a better grip on your hips. "Learn your damn place, slave! You belong to me! You will submit to me now or else no matter what you say, I''ll fuck your ass raw right now!" she barks and spends several minutes hammering your ass before asking again. "Tell me your ass belongs to me, slave!"'
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Submit':
 						*clr & cla
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend14.jpg"></center>'
-						'You finally submit to her command, telling her what she wants to hear before she fucks your asshole raw. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
-						'She smiles at you, pushing your legs together as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, Slave. And what can I do with it?" she asks.'
-						'You reply to her. "Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!"'
-						'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands.'
-						'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
+						'You give in and submit to her command. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
+				        'She smiles at you, pushing your legs together as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, slave. And what can I do with it?"'
+				        '"Anything you want, Mistress Kendra! I belong to you!" you submissively reply.'
+				        'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch! Your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!"'
+				        'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass for a few more minutes, as if to make her point, before she pulls out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Finish': gt 'sexshop', 'kendrafinish'
@@ -1266,8 +1267,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 							gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend14.jpg"></center>'
-							'Though unable to get out more than a simple "No!" against the pain of her endless thrusts, still you refuse and resist her.'
-							'She slams the strap-on balls deep into your ass and starts hammering you as hard and fast as she can. "You will learn your place, right this instant, Slave. You will submit to me, now, or I will stay here all day and fuck your ass until you weep and beg me to stop." For several minutes, she pounds into your sore asshole over and over - it is beginning to hurt a lot. "Tell me, right now, your ass belongs to me, Slave!" she commands you. Your ass is burning. You just can''t take it anymore, and you have to give in.'
+							'Although unable to blurt out more than a simple "No!" against the pain of her endless thrusts, you refuse to submit and continue resisting.'
+							'She slams the strap-on balls deep into your ass and starts hammering you as hard and fast as she can. "You''ll learn your place, right this instant, slave! You will submit to me now, or I''ll stay here all day and fuck your ass until you weep and beg me to stop!" She keeps fucking your ass for a few minutes before she asks again. "Tell me your ass belongs to me right now, slave!"'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 							gs 'pain', 1, 'asshole', 'tear'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -1275,11 +1276,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 								*clr & cla
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend15.jpg"></center>'
-								'You finally submit to her command as your ass starts to have a burning sensation, telling her what she wants to hear. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
-								'She smiles at you as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, Slave. And what can I do with it?" she asks.'
-								'You reply to her. "Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!"'
-								'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands.'
-								'Despite the burning pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
+								'Your ass is pulsing in pain by now and you finally give in and submit to her command. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
+				                'She smiles at you as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, slave. And what can I do with it?"'
+				                '"Anything you want, Mistress Kendra! I belong to you!" you submissively reply.'
+				                'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch! Your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!"'
+				                'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass for a few more minutes, as if to make her point, before she pulls out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 								gs 'pain', 1, 'asshole', 'tear'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -1305,12 +1306,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendrafinish':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/sex/shkend16.jpg"></center>'
-	'As you stand up, she grabs you by the throat and pulls you close. "Stick out your tongue."'
-	'You do as she says and stick out your tongue. She joins her tongue with yours, and the two of you kiss for a few moments. Finally, she stops and grabs your butt cheek roughly - digging her nails into your backside hard enough it hurts a little. Then she lets go and steps away, and the pain quickly fades. She begins taking off her harness. She cleans the dildo and then puts it away before getting dressed. Once she is fully dressed, she finally turns to you again. "You may get dressed, Slave."'
+	'As you stand up, she grabs you by the throat and pulls you in close. "Stick out your tongue."'
+	'You do as she says and the two of you make out for several minutes before she stops and roughly grabs your ass cheek, digging her nails into your backside. She then lets go, steps away and starts sliding the harness off. She cleans the dildo and then puts it away before getting dressed. Once she''s finished, she turns to you again. "You may get dressed, slave."'
 	*nl
-	'"Thank you, Mistress," you tell her as you get dressed.'
-	'Once you are both fully dressed, she says, "You should come visit me, I live in the dorms at the University on the island." She gives you directions to which of the dorm buildings is hers and the floor and room number of her dorm room. "I expect my little white slave to come visit me. Often."'
-	'"Yes, Mistress Kendra," you reply. With that, you leave the basement and go back up to the shop above.'
+	'"Thank you, Mistress," you tell her as you start picking up your clothes and putting them on.'
+	'Once you''re dressed, she gives you a smile. "You should come visit me. I live in the dorms at the university." She gives you directions to her dorm room. "I expect my little white slave to come and visit me... Often."'
+	'"Yes, Mistress Kendra..." you submissively reply before you both leave the basement and head back up to the store.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1323,7 +1324,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shprod':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/shprod.jpg"></center>'
-	'The cashier is right in front of you, offering to help and holding a miniskirt. "Girl, this is very you. Will you try it on?"'
+	'The cashier stands in front of you, holding a miniskirt and offering to help you. "Girl, this is very you. Will you try it on?"'
 
 	act 'Refuse':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 
@@ -1331,8 +1332,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shprod':
 		*clr & cla
 		picrand = 47
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/redlight/erotomaniac/shprod1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You wear the skirt out of the booth and pose in the mirror. You do not have panties on, and the skirt is so short that it looks more like a belt. It does not cover anything.	Your pussy is fully visible from all directions.'
-		'Approaching the mirror, you consider this so-called skirt. The cashier kneels behind you and starts praising how your ass looks in it, his hands wandering around your hips as he get his lips as close to your butt as he can. He says that he wants to "kiss your skin". Words soon cease, and just the feeling of his lips against your skin remains. Closer and closer to your pussy.'
+		'You put the skirt on and walk out of the booth to pose in the mirror. You don''t have any panties on, and the skirt is so short that it looks more like a belt. It doesn''t cover anything and your pussy is fully visible from all directions.'
+		'Approaching the mirror, you consider this so-called skirt. The cashier kneels behind you and starts praising how your ass looks in it, his hands wandering around your hips as he get his lips as close to your ass as he can. He says that he wants to "kiss your skin". Words soon cease, and just the feeling of his lips against your skin remains, getting closer and closer to your pussy.'
 		gs 'willpower', 'cuni', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 			act 'Push him away(<<will_cost>> Willpower)':