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[text edit] from lumepanter

julzor 5 years ago
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+ 1 - 1
locations/beverage.qsrc

@@ -455,7 +455,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'afterdrink':
 	if pcs_hydra > 100:
 		$mtxt = ' while your thirst is quenched, you are starting to feel bloated, with your belly full of liquids.'
 	elseif pcs_hydra >= 80:
-		$mtxt = ' it was sufficant enough to quench your thirst.'
+		$mtxt = ' it was sufficient enough to quench your thirst.'
 	elseif pcs_hydra >= 60:
 		$mtxt = ' you could definitely go another round.'
 	elseif pcs_hydra >= 40:

+ 1 - 1
locations/father.qsrc

@@ -649,7 +649,7 @@ if npc_sex['A28']!0 and fatherwantssex = 1 and mother_go = 1 and hour = 16 and n
     '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/vladimir/father.jpg"></center>'
     ! WD: Fix old nude variable
     if $clothingworntype = 'nude': 'You give your stepfather a lewd smile. "I figured my clothes would only get in the way Daddy, so I took them off for you."'
-    'Knowing words are not neccessary, your stepfather simply unbuttons his pants revealing his stiff cock: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, help your old man out will you?"'
+    'No words are neccessary, your stepfather simply unbuttons his pants revealing his stiff cock: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, help your old man out will you?"'
     act 'Change your mind and leave':gt $loc, $metka
     act 'Get down on your knees': gs 'fathersex', 'fatherblow4'
 end

+ 2 - 2
locations/foto_models.qsrc

@@ -1386,7 +1386,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'krystal1':
 						act 'Continue':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img src="images/locations/city/citycenter/photo/portraits/krystal_b/meeting/6.jpg"></center>'
-							'	You say your farewells and watch her work for a few more mintues. If nothing else, she certainly has no shame.'
+							'	You say your farewells and watch her work for a few more minutes. If nothing else, she certainly has no shame.'
 							krystal = 2
 							act 'Leave':gt 'foto','studio'
 						end
@@ -1673,7 +1673,7 @@ if jeff = 3:gt 'foto_models','jeff_3'
 if jeff = 4:gt 'foto_models','jeff_model'
 	'<center><img src="images/locations/city/citycenter/photo/portraits/jeff_m/talking/0.jpg"></center>'
 	'	Walking around the studio, you suddenly stop when you see a naked girl staring at you.'
-	'	<i>Is she a model here? Why is she starring at me like that...?</i>'
+	'	<i>Is she a model here? Why is she staring at me like that...?</i>'
 	'	Seeing you notice her, she waves you over.'
 	act 'Walk over':
 		*clr & cla

+ 5 - 4
locations/gschool_girls_bathroom.qsrc

@@ -387,6 +387,7 @@ if soniaPS > 0 and rand(0,1) = 0:
 	gtoilet_rand = rand(1,100)
 	if gtoilet_rand <= 30:
 		killvar 'gtoilet_rand'
+		$rand_boy = 'a boy you don''t know'
 		gt 'gschool_girls_bathroom', 'company1'
 	elseif gtoilet_rand <= 60:
 		killvar 'gtoilet_rand'
@@ -431,14 +432,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'company1':
 		if pcs_inhib < 40:inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Girls bathroom</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/bathroom/sex/masturbate'+ rand(1,2) +'.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'Listening to <<$rand_girl>> getting pounded, the constant slapping sounds of flesh and her moans of pleasure is exciting - too exciting for you. You know you shouldn''t, you know it''s risky, but you just can''t resist: You pull your panties off, hike up your skirt and spread you legs. Your hands slides down, down your thigh, then back up, up towards your crotch. Your pussy lips are already swollen and starting to get wet, and your clit stands out as if to make it easier for you to find it.' 
+		'Listening to <<$rand_girl>> getting her ass violated, the constant slapping sounds of flesh and her moans of pleasure is exciting - too exciting for you. You know you shouldn''t, you know it''s risky, but you just can''t resist: You pull your panties off, hike up your skirt and spread your legs. Your hands slide down, down your thigh, then back up, up towards your crotch. Your pussy lips are already swollen and starting to get wet, and your clit stands out as if to make it easier for you to find it.'
 		*nl
-		'You rub your sensitive little nub carefully, to ease yourself into the pleasure; if you don''t stay in control, you''re going to make sounds and you don''t want them to notice you. After teasing yourself for a bit, you sink two of your fingers into your wet hole, gasping soundlessly, and mimic the fuck <<$rand_boy>> is giving <<$rand_girl>>. You add your other hand to the mix, rubbing your clit while you''re fingerfucking yourself, faster and faster as they get louder and louder.'
+		'You rub your sensitive little nub carefully, to ease yourself into the pleasure; if you don''t stay in control, you''re going to make sounds and you don''t want them to notice you. After teasing yourself for a bit, you sink two of your fingers into your wet hole, gasping soundlessly, and mimic the fuck <<$rand_boy>> is giving a girl you don''t know. You add your other hand to the mix, rubbing your clit while you''re finger fucking yourself, faster and faster as they get louder and louder, and even play with your asshole a little bit, encouraged by the girl''s audible pleasure.'
 		$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-		$orgasm_txt = 'You have to bite your lip to keep from crying out as an orgasm shoots through your body and causes you to convulse on the toilet seats like you are having a seizure.'
+		$orgasm_txt = 'You have to bite your lip to keep from crying out as an orgasm shoots through your body and causes you to convulse on the toilet seat like you are having a seizure.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'mast', 10
 		gs 'stat'
-		'By the sound of it, you came in perfect unison with her and only a few moments later, you can hear him grunt as well. They talk in low voices again after they have both cum; the water is running for a couple of seconds as they clean up, then you hear the door open and close and all is quiet once more.'
+		'By the sound of it, you came in perfect unison with her and only a few moments later, you can hear him grunt as well. They talk in low voices again after they have both cum; the water is running for a couple of seconds as they clean up, then you hear the door open and close and everything is quiet once more.'
 		act 'Go to Class':gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	end
 end

+ 1 - 1
locations/gschool_gossip.qsrc

@@ -589,7 +589,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'girls':
 		'"I kinda feel sorry for Lena, she can''t date any guys, because Vitek keeps chasing them off."'
 		'"Yeah I think she would be a lot nicer if he would just let her date a nice guy."'
 	elseif chat_rand = 17:
-		'"Have you seen the way Lera looks at Lena? She is so in love in Lena."'
+		'"Have you seen the way Lera looks at Lena? She is so in love with Lena."'
 		'"Who could miss it, what a total lesbo."'
 	elseif chat_rand = 18:
 		'"Did you see the picture of Petia''s little dick?" said with a giggle.'

+ 3 - 3
locations/gschool_lessons.qsrc

@@ -890,7 +890,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'literature':
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/classroom/sleeping.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'Fall asleep, end of class bell wakes <<$pcs_firstname>> up.'
+			'You fell asleep and the end of class bell wakes you up.'
 			act 'Leave class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		end
 	end
@@ -2200,7 +2200,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'music':
 		else
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/classroom/sleeping.jpg"></center>'
-			'Fall asleep, end of class bell wakes <<$pcs_firstname>> up.'
+			'You fell asleep and the end of class bell wakes you up.'
 			act 'Leave class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		end
 	end
@@ -2382,7 +2382,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'art':
 		else
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/classroom/sleeping.jpg"></center>'
-			'Fall asleep, end of class bell wakes <<$pcs_firstname>> up.'
+			'You fell asleep and the end of class bell wakes you up.'
 			act 'Leave class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		end
 	end

+ 1 - 1
locations/preALT.qsrc

@@ -202,7 +202,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Cursed Schoolgirl Start 2':
 									gs 'obj_din', 'old'
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/system/magicschoolgirl.jpg"></center>'
-									'Welcome to the Cursed Schoolgirl version! Guide <<$pcs_nickname>> through her school life, relationships and myriad other issues that might pop up and all with the added spice of magic to keep things interesting!'
+									'Welcome to the Cursed Schoolgirl version! Guide <<$pcs_nickname>> through her school life, relationships and myriad of other issues that might pop up and all with the added spice of magic to keep things interesting!'
 									act 'Begin!':
 										if start_location = 2:
 											gt 'Gadhouse', 'intro'

+ 1 - 1
locations/trFatherMisha.qsrc

@@ -457,7 +457,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 					gs 'arousal', 'kiss_give', 5, 'incest'
 					gs'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/mikhail/terminal/trfatherqw_39.jpg"></center>'
-					'Without any hesitation, you jump up from your chair, quickly walking towards your father. You grab his face and lean in for a kiss. Your father is shocked at first but it doesn''t take long time before his tongue is in your mouth...'
+					'Without any hesitation, you jump up from your chair, quickly walking towards your father. You grab his face and lean in for a kiss. Your father is shocked at first, but it doesn''t take long for him to get into it and after a short time neither of you is holding themselves back. It feels good to let the feelings free finally. All the tension that was there between you two has disappeared. While you enjoy the moment, your arousal keeps building...'
 					'As you make out none of you is holding back. You''re happy that you don''t have to hold back anymore. All of the animosity disappears and you let yourself enjoy the moment.'
 					'Your arousal is building, knowing this is forbidden but you can''t help yourself. The forbidden attraction between a father and daughter is too arousing to ignore...'
 					trfatherMishaQW = 6

+ 1 - 1
locations/train_incidental.qsrc

@@ -411,7 +411,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/train/sex/leskuni.mp4" ></video></center>'
-	'As you get off the train and walk into the train station, you are greeted by a very unusual sight. One girl is sitting on a bench with her legs spread wide, while another girl is kneeling down on the floor, with her face buried in her crotch. A few people are watching the two girls, but most people are just ignoring it, you watch the two of them feeling yourself getting aroused. Sadly as you make your way towards the exit you can no longer seem them, but you can still hear them in the distance.'
+	'As you get off the train and walk into the train station, you are greeted by a very unusual sight. One girl is sitting on a bench with her legs spread wide, while another girl is kneeling down on the floor, with her face buried in her crotch. A few people are watching the two girls, but most people are just ignoring it, you watch the two of them feeling yourself getting aroused. Sadly as you make your way towards the exit you can no longer see them, but you can still hear them in the distance.'
 	act 'Continue': gt $loc, $metka
 end