Merge remote-tracking branch 'origin/master'

locations/artem_date_events.qsrc

@@ -23,54 +23,54 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'firstdate':
 	npc_rel['A2'] += 1
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/walk_<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'You enjoy a pleasant walk in the park, sharing all kinds of small talks with Artem.'
-	'After a while you end up near the movie theater. When Artem sees it, he suggests: "Hey, let''s go see a movie!"'
+	'You enjoy a pleasant walk in the park while making small talk with Artem.'
+	'After a while, you end up near the movie theater. Artem''s eyes light up when he sees it. "Hey, let''s go see a movie!"'
 	minut += 15
 	gs 'stat'
-	act 'A movie sounds like fun!':
+	act 'Sounds like fun':
 		*clr & cla
 		npc_rel['A2'] += 1
 		minut += 120
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/cinema/kino_<<rand(1,3)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You enter the movie theater with Artem. After he buys tickets for the both of you, he buys some popcorn, candy and soda for the both of you. After he pays for the items the two of you head into the dark theater and you find some nice seats in the back row and watch the movie.'
+		'You enter the movie theater with Artem. After he buys the tickets and some popcorn, candy and soda for the two of you, you head into the dark theater and find some seats in the back row to watch the movie.'
 		act 'Leave the theater':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/walk_<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
 			if rand(1,5) = 1 and hour >= 20:
-				'When the movie ends, you and Artem leave the theater and he offers to walk you home. The two of you head back through the park as you walk. After the two of you walk for awhile, you see a group of older gopniks hanging out around a bench just ahead. They are drinking and you can hear them from where you are, they are obviously already a bit drunk.'
+				'When the movie ends, you and Artem leave the theater and he offers to walk you home. The two of you head back through the park, but see a group of older gopniks hanging out around a bench just up ahead. They''re drinking and are a little rowdy.'
 				act 'Just walk past them': gt 'artem_date_events','artemGopSkver'
 			else
-				'When the movie ends, you and Artem leave the theater and he offers to walk you home. The two of you head back through the park as you walk.'
-				'Artem walks you back to your apartment door. Once you are just outside your apartment door he stops and looks at you. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-				'You smile to him. "I had fun too, Artem."'
-				'His smiles widely. "Great, I''m glad you had fun, maybe we can do it again some time?"'
-				'You nod a bit. "Sure, maybe. We''ll see."'
-				'He smiles and nods. "Ok. Well, I better get home. Talk to you later."'
-				'"Bye Artem, I had a wonderful time." You tell him and with that he walks back down the stairs to the first floor and presumably his apartment.'
+				'When the movie ends, you and Artem leave the theater and he offers to walk you home.'
+				'Arriving outside your apartment door, Artem stops and looks at you. "I had fun, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+				'You smile at him. "Me too."'
+				'He smiles widely. "Great! Maybe we can do it again some time?"'
+				'You nod. "Maybe. We''ll see."'
+				'He smiles and nods. "Okay, I better get home. Talk to you later."'
+				'"Bye Artem," you reply and he walks back down the stairs to his apartment.'
 				act 'Go home': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_2'
 			end
 		end
 	end
-	act 'Let''s just keep walking':
+	act 'Just keep walking':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 30
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/walk_<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You don''t really feel like going the cinema, and tell him: "Nah, let''s just enjoy the walk we''re on."'
+		'You don''t really feel like going to the cinema. "Let''s just enjoy the walk we''re on."'
 		if rand(1,5) = 1 and hour >= 20:
-			'Artem is happy enough to just spend time with you, regardless of what the two of you are doing. He nods as you continue on your walk, talking about everyday things. After the two of you walk for awhile, you see a group of older gopniks hanging out around a bench just ahead. They are drinking and you can hear them from here, they are obviously already a bit drunk.'
+			'Artem is happy enough to just spend time with you, regardless of what the two of you are doing. He nods as you continue on your walk, talking about everyday things. After walking for a while, you see a group of older gopniks hanging out around a bench just up ahead. They''re drinking and are a little rowdy.'
 			act 'Just walk past them': gt 'artem_date_events','artemGopSkver'
 		else
-			'Artem is happy enough to just spend time with you, regardless of what the two of you are doing. He nods as you continue on your walk, talking about everyday things. After the two of you walk for a while talking, he checks his watch and says, "We should be getting back, I will walk you to your door."'
-			'Artem walks you back to your apartment door. Once you are just outside your apartment door he stops and looks at you. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-			'You smile at him. "I had fun too Artem."'
-			'His smiles widely. "Great, I''m glad you had fun, maybe we can do it again some time."'
-			'You nod a bit. "Sure, maybe. We''ll see."'
-			'He smiles and nods. "Ok well I better get home, talk to you later."'
-			'"Bye Artem, I had a wonderful time." You tell him and with that he walks back down the stairs to the first floor and presumably his apartment.'
+			'Artem is happy enough to just spend time with you, regardless of what the two of you are doing. He nods as you continue on your walk, talking about everyday things. After a while, he checks his watch. "We should be getting back. I''ll walk you to your door."'
+			'Once you''re outside your apartment door, Artem stops and looks at you. "I had fun, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+			'You smile at him. "Me too."'
+			'He smiles widely. "Great! Maybe we can do it again some time?"'
+			'You nod. "Maybe. We''ll see."'
+			'He smiles and nods. "Okay, I better get home. Talk to you later."'
+			'"Bye Artem," you reply and he walks back down the stairs to his apartment.'
 			act 'Go home': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_2'
 		end
 	end
@@ -106,44 +106,47 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'artemGopSkver':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/walkgop.jpg"></center>'
 	if grupTipe = 4:
-		'Just as you are about to make it past them, several of the gopniks get in your way, they make somewhat of a circle around you and Artem. You have seen them around before but you don''t really know them.'
-		'Somehow, one of them knows your name. They look at you with disdain and the leader of their group says: "<<$pcs_nickname>>? What are you doing with this bitch?"'
+		'Just as you''re about to make it past them, several of the gopniks get in your way, making a circle around you. You''ve seen them around before, but don''t really know them.'
+		'Somehow, one of them knows your name. They look at you with disdain and the leader of their group says "<<$pcs_nickname>>? What are you doing with this bitch?"'
 		act 'Tell them to mind their own business':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			grupvalue[4] += 1
 			npc_rel['A2'] += 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/fuckoff1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You give them a look of disdain showing you are not impressed. "Mind your own fucking business." Artem tenses up besides you obviously afraid of what they might do after you said that.'
-			'The leader of this little group laughs. "Come on, don''t be like that, dump this loser and have some fun with us, girly."'
-			'You push your way past him and as you get clear of them you flip them the bird. Fortunately they leave you alone, other than a few taunting calls directed at you and Artem. Once you make it further away from them, Artem relaxes a little. Artem walks you back to your apartment door. Once you are just outside your apartment door he stops and looks at you. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, you know other than when we ran into those gopniks, I can''t believe you said that."'
-			'You smile to him. "They respect strength and attitude, don''t take their shit and they will respect you for it, just be willing to back it up if you have to. Anyways I had fun as well Artem."'
-			'His smiles widely. "Great, I''m glad you had fun, maybe we can do it again some time?"'
-			'You nod a bit. "Sure, maybe. We''ll see."'
-			'He smiles and nods. "Ok, well. I better get home, talk to you later."'
-			'"Bye Artem, I had a wonderful time." You tell him and with that he walks back down the stairs to the first floor and presumably his apartment.'
+			'You give them a look of disdain showing you''re not impressed. "Mind your own fucking business," you reply and Artem tenses up beside you.'
+			'The leader laughs. "Come on, don''t be like that. Dump this loser and have some fun with us, girl."'
+			'You push your way past him and flip them the bird. Fortunately, other than throwing a few taunting remarks at you, they leave you alone. Once you make it away from them, Artem relaxes a little and walks you home.' 
+			*nl
+			'Arriving at your apartment, Artem smiles. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, you know other than when we ran into those gopniks. I can''t believe you said that!"'
+			'You smile back at him. "They respect strength and attitude. Don''t take their shit and they will respect you for it, just be willing to back it up if you have to. Anyway, I had fun too."'
+			'He smiles widely. "Great! I''m glad you had fun, maybe we can do it again some time?"'
+			'You nod. "Maybe. We''ll see."'
+			'He smiles and nods. "Okay, I better get home. Talk to you later."'
+			'"Bye Artem," you reply and he walks back down the stairs to his apartment.'
 			act 'Go home': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_2'
 		end
 	else
-		'Just as you are about to make it past them several of the gopniks get in your way, they make somewhat of a circle around you and Artem. They don''t look familiar to you.'
-		'Somehow, one of them knows your name. They look at you with disdain and the leader of their group says: "<<$pcs_nickname>>? What are you doing with this bitch?"'
+		'Just as you''re about to make it past them, several of the gopniks get in your way, making a circle around you and Artem.'
+		'You don''t recognize them, yet one of them knows your name. They look at you with disdain and the leader of their group says "<<$pcs_nickname>>? What are you doing with this bitch?"'
 		act 'Ignore them and keep walking':
 			*clr & cla
 			gopniktrouble = rand(1,2)
 			if gopniktrouble = 1:
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/walkgop.jpg"></center>'
-				'The leader steps directly in front of Artem and the others close in giving you nowhere to go to without running into them. The leader speaks to Artem. "This is our part of the park, you owe us a toll for using it, give us all your money you have, and your girl can pass, bitch."'
-				'You can tell Artem is scared and will likely do what they ask. But you don''t want him to lose all his money, though if you say something, it could make things worse.'
+				'The leader steps directly in front of Artem and the others close in, giving you nowhere to go as the leader speaks to Artem. "This is our part of the park and you owe us a toll for using it. Pay it and your girl can pass, bitch."'
+				'You can tell Artem is scared and will likely do what they ask. You don''t want him to lose all his money, but saying something could make things worse.'
 				act 'Say nothing':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/walkgop.jpg"></center>'
-					'Artem glances at you, then reaches into his pocket and pulls out his wallet. The leader snatches it away and pulls out all the money and throws the empty wallet back at Artems face. "God, what a bitch. Come on guys drinks are on this bitch." He says with a laugh and then they all walk off. Artem blushes and picks up his wallet before he walks you back to your apartment. He doesn''t say anything until you reach your door. Once you are just outside your apartment door, he stops and looks at you. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, you know other than when we ran into those gopniks."'
-					'You smile at him. "Yeah it was a little scary, sorry they took all your money. Anyways, I had fun as well Artem."'
+					'Artem glances at you, then reaches into his pocket and pulls out his wallet. The leader snatches it away and pulls out all the money before throwing the empty wallet back at Artem''s face. "God, what a bitch. Come on guys, drinks are on this loser!" he says with a laugh and they all walk away. Artem blushes and picks up his wallet before he walks you back to your apartment. He doesn''t say anything until you reach your door.'
+					'"I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, you know other than when we ran into those gopniks."'
+					'You smile at him. "Yeah, it was a little scary. Sorry they took all your money, but I had fun too."'
 					*nl
-					'His smiles and says, "Don''t worry about it, I keep most of my money in the bank, so they didn''t get much. I''m glad you had fun though, maybe we can do it again some time."'
-					'You nod a bit. "Sure maybe, we''ll see."'
-					'He smiles and nods. "Ok well I better get home, talk to you later."'
-					'"Bye Artem, I had a wonderful time." You tell him, and with that he walks back down the stairs to the first floor and presumably his apartment.'
+					'He smiles. "Don''t worry about it. I keep most of my money in the bank, so they didn''t get much. I''m glad you had fun though. Maybe we can do it again some time?"'
+					'You nod. "Maybe. We''ll see."'
+					'He smiles and nods. "Okay, I better get home. Talk to you later."'
+					'"Bye Artem," you reply and he walks back down the stairs to his apartment.'
 					act 'Go home': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_2'
 				end
 				gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'hard'
@@ -157,12 +160,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'artemGopSkver':
 				end
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/walk_<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
-				'You hold Artem''s hand tightly and pick up the pace, pretending you didn''t hear the Gopniks as you quickly walk away from them. Fortunately they leave you alone, other than a few taunting calls directed at you and Artem. Once you make it further away from them Artem relaxes a little. Artem walks you back to your apartment door. Once you are just outside your apartment door he stops and looks at you. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, you know other than when we ran into those gopniks."'
-				'You smile to him. "Yeah it was a little scary. Anyways I had fun as well Artem."'
-				'His smiles widely. "Great, I''m glad you had fun, maybe we can do it again some time."'
-				'You nod a bit. "Sure maybe, we''ll see."'
-				'He smiles and nods. "Ok well I better get home, talk to you later."'
-				'"Bye Artem, I have a wonderful time." You tell him and with that he walks back down the stairs to the first floor and presumably his apartment.'
+				'You hold Artem''s hand tightly and pick up the pace, pretending you didn''t hear the gopniks as you quickly walk away from them. Fortunately, other throwing a few taunting remarks at you, they leave you alone. Once you make it away from them, Artem relaxes a little and walks you home.'
+				'Arriving at your apartment, Artem smiles. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, you know other than when we ran into those gopniks."'
+				'You smile back at him. "Yeah, it was a little scary. I had fun too though."'
+				'He smiles widely. "Great! Maybe we can do it again some time?"'
+				'You nod. "Maybe. We''ll see."'
+				'He smiles and nods. "Okay, I better get home. Talk to you later."'
+				'"Bye Artem," you reply and he walks back down the stairs to his apartment.'
 				act 'Go home': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_2'
 			end
 		end
@@ -177,12 +181,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'artemGopSkver':
 		act 'Stand up to them (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 	end
 end
-			
+
 if $ARGS[0] = 'stand_up':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/walkgop.jpg"></center>'
-	'You indignantly reply: "He''s not a bitch, Artem is my friend!"'
-	'The Gopnik walks up to Artem, and pokes him in the chest with his finger. He asks: "Oh really...? What do you think, bitch? Are you a bitch or what?"'
+	'"He''s not a bitch! Artem is my friend!" you indignantly reply'
+	'The gopnik walks up to Artem and pokes him in the chest. "Oh really?" he asks. "What do you think, bitch? Are you a bitch or what?"'
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'hard'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 		act 'Get between them (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -193,21 +197,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stand_up':
 			npc_rel['A2'] += 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/walkgop_knee.jpg"></center>'
-			'You quickly get in-between Artem and the Gopnik, shielding him with your body. You threaten them: Don''t touch him! I''ll call the police!"'
-			'The Gopnik is not impressed. He pulls out a knife and puts it against your throat: "Why are you wasting your time with this loser, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+			'You quickly get inbetween Artem and the gopnik, shielding him with your body. "Don''t touch him or I''ll call the police!" you say in your most threatening manner.'
+			'The gopnik isn''t impressed. He pulls out a knife and puts it against your throat. "Why are you wasting your time with this loser, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 			'You can see his friends slowly encroaching around you. There''s no way you can run away now.'
-			'You look into his eyes and sigh: "Come on... just let us leave. Please? You can take my money."'
-			'The Gopnik is satisfied with that prospect, and lowers the knife. After you give him all your money, he lets you and Artem leave. You feel bad for getting robbed like that, but you still feel you did the right thing. Who knows what they would''ve done to Artem, if you didn''t get involved!'
+			'You look into his eyes and sigh. "Come on, just let us leave. Please? You can take my money."'
+			'The gopnik is satisfied with that prospect, and lowers the knife. After you give him all your money, he lets you and Artem leave. You feel bad for getting robbed like that, but you still feel you did the right thing. Who knows what they would''ve done to Artem if you didn''t get involved?'
 			act 'Go home':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 5
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/park/walk_<<rand(1,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
-				'Once you make it further away from them Artem relaxes a little. Artem walks you back to your apartment door. Once you are just outside your apartment door he stops and looks at you. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, you know, other than when we ran into those gopniks."'
-				'You smile to him. "Yeah it was a little scary. Anyways I had fun as well Artem."'
-				'His smiles widely. "Great, I''m glad you had fun, maybe we can do it again some time."'
-				'You nod a bit. "Sure maybe, we''ll see."'
-				'He smiles and nods. "Ok, well. I better get home, talk to you later."'
-				'"Bye Artem, I had a wonderful time." You tell him and with that he walks back down the stairs to the first floor and presumably his apartment.'
+				'Once you make it away from them, Artem relaxes a little. Artem walks you back home.' 
+				'Arriving at your apartment, Artem smiles. "I had fun <<$pcs_nickname>>, you know other than when we ran into those gopniks."'
+				'You smile back at him. "Yeah, it was a little scary, but I had fun too."'
+				'He smiles widely. "Great! Maybe we can do it again some time?"'
+				'You nod. "Maybe. We''ll see."'
+				'He smiles and nods. "Okay, I better get home. Talk to you later."'
+				'"Bye Artem," you reply and he walks back down the stairs to his apartment.'
 				act 'Go home': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_2'
 			end
 		end
@@ -217,12 +222,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stand_up':
 	act 'Watch in silence':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/walkgop_udar.jpg"></center>'
-		'"I''m not a bitch", Artem says quietly.'
-		'The Gopnik grins: "We''ll see about that!"'
-		'He hits Artem hard in the stomach. Artem buckles over and falls to his knees. The Gopnik and his friends laugh while Artem lies groaning on the ground.'
-		'He turns to you: "Everyone can see he''s a bitch, <<$pcs_nickname>>. What do you even see him him? Seriously..."'
-		'Then he continues, with an evil smirk on his face: "So... you really like him? Enough to help him out of this mess he talked himself into? There is one thing you could do..."'
-		'The other Gopniks are all laughing when their leader suggests: "Do a striptease! If it''s a good one, we''ll leave him alone. Someone, play some music."'
+		'"I''m not a bitch...", Artem says quietly.'
+		'The gopnik grins. "We''ll see about that!"'
+		'He hits Artem hard in the stomach, causing him to buckle over and fall to his knees. The gopnik and his friends laugh while Artem lies groaning on the ground.'
+		'He then turns to you. "Everyone can see he''s a bitch, <<$pcs_nickname>>. What do you even see him him? Seriously..." An evil smirk then appears on his face. "So... you really like him? Enough to help him out of this mess he talked himself into?"'
+		'He places a hand on your shoulder. "There is something you can do... A striptease! If it''s a good one, we''ll leave him alone. Someone play some music." The other gopniks all laugh.'
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		gs 'willpower', 'humiliation', 'resist', 'hard'
@@ -232,12 +236,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stand_up':
 				*clr & cla
 				npc_rel['A2'] += 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/walkgop_udar2.jpg"></center>'
-				'Wait, what!?'
-				'You answer: "No way, you perverts! Just leave us alone!"'
-				'The Gopnik walks back over to Artem and kicks him in the face. A few seconds later, one of his friends also kicks Artem in the back, soon they all join in kicking him. You can''t take it anymore and quickly throw yourself on top of Artem, so they can''t kick him any more.'
-				'The Gopnik looks down at the two of you, and spits on the ground. He sighs: "Whatever..."'
-				'The Gopniks leave you alone and go deeper into the park, probably to go drink some beer or something. You help Artem up on his feet, carefully.'
-				'Artem wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed that you had to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home. Once you get him home, you help him to bed. He thanks you but asks you to go. Not sure what to say you do as he asks and leave.'
+				'"Wait, what!?" you answer. "No way, you perverts! Just leave us alone!"'
+				'The gopnik walks back over to Artem and kicks him in the face. A few seconds later, one of his friends also kicks Artem in the back and they''re all soon kicking him. You can''t take it anymore and quickly throw yourself on top of Artem so they can''t continue.'
+				'The gopnik looks down at the two of you and spits on the ground. "Fucking bitch needs his girl to save him. What a loser!"'
+				'The gopniks leave you alone and go deeper into the park as you carefully help Artem to his feet.'
+				'He wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed that you had to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home.'
+				'"Thanks <<$pcs_nickname>>, but you can go now." Not sure what to say, you do as he asks and leave.'
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Leave': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_1'
@@ -249,13 +253,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stand_up':
 			*clr & cla
 			inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/strip1.jpg"></center>'
-			'Well, if that''s what you have to do to get out of here...'
-			'You begin to dance to the music a bit awkwardly, and immediately get boo''d.'
-			'The Gopnik threatens: "We said striptease, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Not dance!"'
-			'You nod and slowly begin to undress to the music, trying to avoid their greedy looks.'
-			'Artem noticed their looks as well and shouts: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, stop! You don''t have to do this!"'
-			'The Gopnik kicks him in the ribs and tells him: "Shut up, bitch! She''s saving your ass, show some respect."'
-			'Artem is too afraid to argue with them, and you awkwardly remove your top showing off your breasts which finally gets them hooting, hollering, and laughing instead of booing.'
+			'You start awkwardly dancing to the music and are immediately chastised. "We said striptease, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Not dance!"'
+			'You nod and slowly start slowly undressing to the music while trying to avoid their greedy looks.'
+			'Artem notices what''s happening. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, stop! You don''t have to do this!"'
+			'The gopnik kicks him in the ribs. "Shut up, bitch! She''s saving your ass, so show some respect!"'
+			'Artem is too afraid to argue with them as you awkwardly remove your top, showing off your breasts which finally gets them hooting, hollering and laughing.'
 			act 'Strip naked':
 				*clr & cla
 				inhib_exp += rand(0,1)
@@ -264,13 +266,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stand_up':
 				minut += 5
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/strip2.jpg"></center>'
 				if hotcat <= 4:
-					'You slowly remove all of your clothes until you are completely naked in front of them, with that they turn off the music. The leader walks up to you and say. "Fuck you are even uglier naked. I didn''t think that was even possible. Put some clothes on before I throw up." The others all burst out laughing at that. Then they all walk off laughing apparently done with their fun, you quickly get dressed again as Artem struggles to his feet. Artem wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you had to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home. Once you get him home, you help him to bed. "You didn''t have to do that."'
-					'You smile to him. "I couldn''t let them hurt you like that."'
-					'He frowns. "I would have healed, anyways I could use some rest, so see you later ok." He rolls over obviously not wanting to talk anymore. So you get up and leave.'
+					'You slowly remove all of your clothes until you''re completely naked in front of them and they turn off the music. The leader walks up to you with a scowl. "Fuck, you''re even uglier naked. I didn''t think that was even possible. Put some clothes on before I throw up." The others all burst out laughing before they all walk away laughing. You quickly get dressed as Artem struggles to his feet and wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you had to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home.' 
+					'Once you get him home, you help him to bed. "You didn''t have to do that."'
+					'You smile at him. "I couldn''t let them hurt you like that."'
+					'He frowns. "I would have healed! Anyway, I could use some rest, so see you later okay?" He rolls over, obviously not wanting to talk anymore, so you get up and leave.'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Leave': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_1'
 				else
-					'You slowly remove all of your clothes until you are completely naked in front of them, with that they turn off the music. All of the Gopniks gather around you and their leader grins and gives you a choice: "Not bad <<$pcs_nickname>>, nice tits. It''s a shame you''re wasting them on him. And now, you''re going to suck all us off. If you do a good job, we''ll let you go." You know you have no chance to run away, so you either have to do what they ask or you could try your luck at fighting them, but betting against six men? Most likely all that good that would do is getting the shit beat out of you and then raped. Maybe if you distract them you could run away.'
+					'You slowly remove all of your clothes until you''re completely naked in front of them and they turn off the music. They all gather round you as the leader grins. "Not bad, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You''ve got nice tits, just a shame that you''re wasting them on him. Now you''re going to suck all us off. If you do a good job, we''ll let you go."' 
+					'Trying to fight them all would most likely result in you getting the shit beat out of you and raped. Maybe you can make a run for it if you distract them first?'
 					act 'Get down on your knees': gt 'artem_date_events', 'blow_bang'
 					gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'hard'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -303,17 +307,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stand_up':
 							if artemRand = 1:
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/walk_save.jpg"></center>'
-								'You look around you, and suddenly shout in a random direction: "Dad, I''m over here!"'
-								'As the Gopniks turn around to see who you''re shouting at, you quickly grab Artem by the arm and start running. When you''re satisfied the Gopniks are no longer following you, you find a quiet area and put your clothes back on. Artem wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you had to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home. Once you get him home, you help him to bed. "You didn''t have to do that."'
-								'You smile to him. "I couldn''t let them hurt you like that."'
-								'He frowns. "I would have healed, anyways I could use some rest, so see you later ok." He rolls over obviously not wanting to talk anymore. So you get up and leave.'
+								'You look around and suddenly shout in a random direction. "Dad, I''m over here!"'
+								'As the gopniks turn to see who you''re shouting at, you quickly grab Artem by the arm and start running. When you''re sure the gopniks are no longer following you, you find a quiet area and put your clothes back on as Artem wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you had to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home.'
+								'Once you get him home, you help him to bed. "You didn''t have to do that," he remarks.'
+								'You smile at him. "I couldn''t let them hurt you like that."'
+								'He frowns. "I would have healed! Anyway, I could use some rest, so see you later okay?" He rolls over, obviously not wanting to talk anymore, so you get up and leave.'
 								minut += 5
 								gs 'stat'
 								act 'Leave': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_1'
 							else
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/run.jpg"></center>'
-								'You look around you, and suddenly shout: "Dad, I''m over here!"'
-								'As the Gopniks turn around to see who you''re shouting at, you quickly grab Artem by the arm and start running. Unfortunately, one of the Gopniks wasn''t fooled by your diversion, and grabs Artem and then shoves him hard to the ground. Artem yells at you. "Run!" You try to run, you can hear the sounds of them hitting Artem and someone chasing you.'
+								'You look around you and suddenly shout "Dad, I''m over here!"'
+								'As the gopniks turn to see who you''re shouting at, you quickly grab Artem by the arm and start running. Unfortunately, one of the gopniks wasn''t fooled by your diversion, and grabs Artem before shoving him hard to the ground.'
+								'"Run, <<$pcs_nickname>>!" Artem shouts behind you. You hear them beating Artem as someone chases you.'
 								act 'Try to escape':
 									*clr & cla
 									gs 'stat'
@@ -321,47 +327,46 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'stand_up':
 									if escape >= 80:
 										minut += 5
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/run.jpg"></center>'
-										'Thanks to your natural aptitude and practice at running you manage to finally get away, several times it sounded like they were about to catch you, only to hear someone breathing heavy right behind you and then start to fade away. After what seems like forever, you suddenly hear nothing behind you. You glance back and see no one, you stop long enough to put your cloths on before you jog to the edge of the park where there is several other people that look at you funny. You stop and catch you breath looking back for Artem.'
+										'Thanks to your natural aptitude and practice at running, you manage to get away. After what seems like forever, you suddenly hear nothing behind you. You glance back and see no one, stopping long enough to put your clothes on before you jog to the edge of the park where several people give you funny looks. You stop and catch your breath while looking back for Artem.'
 										act 'Run home':
 											*clr & cla
 											minut += 10
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/run.jpg"></center>'
-											'After catching your breath a moment and not seeing Artem you run the rest of the way home. You don''t stop for anyone or anything, until you are safely inside your apartment.'
+											'After catching your breath and not seeing Artem anywhere, you run the rest of the way home. You don''t stop for anyone or anything until you''re safely inside your apartment.'
 											act 'Home': gt 'korrPar'
 										end
 										act 'Wait for Artem': 
 											*clr & cla
-											 artemQW['waited'] = 1
+											artemQW['waited'] = 1
 											minut += 60
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/walk_save.jpg"></center>'
-											'After awhile you finally see Artem limping towards you. He smiles through busted bloody lips when he sees you. You rush over to him and help him walk, putting one of his arms over your shoulder. Artem wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you had to see him like this. "I''m glad you got away, they said they were going to rape you if they caught you." He says as he hugs you obviously not made you ran and left him. He seems genuinely glad you are safe. You walk in silence as you help him get home.'
+											'After a while, you finally see Artem limping towards you. He smiles through busted bloody lips when he sees you. You rush over to him and help him walk, putting one of his arms over your shoulder as he wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you had to see him like this. "I''m glad you got away. They said they were going to rape you if they caught you," he says as he hugs you. He seems genuinely glad you''re safe as you walk in silence helping him home.'
 											*nl
-											'Once you get him home, you help him to bed and then clean up his wounds and tend to him as best you can. "Thank you <<$pcs_nickname>> for everything. For helping me home, for going out with me and for helping me now. I just wish it could have been a better date."'
-											'You smile to him and place a finger on his lips. "Shhh, it''s fine, I am just sorry you got hurt."'
-											'He smiles. "Yeah well maybe our next date won''t be so exciting. The pain meds are kicking in, I could really use some sleep, see you later ok." He rolls over obviously not wanting to talk anymore and in obvious pain. So you get up and leave him to rest.'
+											'Once you get him home, you help him to bed and tend to him as best as you can. "Thank you <<$pcs_nickname>>. For everything. For helping me home, for going out with me and for helping me now. I just wish it could have been a better date."'
+											'You smile at him and place a finger on his lips. "Shhh, it''s fine. I''m just sorry you got hurt."'
+											'He smiles. "Yeah? Well maybe our next date won''t be so exciting. The pain meds are kicking in and I could really use some sleep, so I''ll see you later, okay?" You get up and leave him to rest.'
 											act 'Leave': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_1'
 										end
-										act 'Call the Police': 
+										act 'Call the police': 
 											*clr & cla
 											minut += 60
-											 artemQW['called_police'] = 1
+											artemQW['called_police'] = 1
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/patrol.jpg"></center>'
-											'Once you are safe you pull out your cell phone and call the police. You tell them the gopniks are assaulting Artem and tried to attack you as well. After you give them all the details you hang up, the dispatcher said a car would be right there. Almost half a hour later a police car pulls up slowly at the entrance of the park and two officers get out. You hurry over to them. You tell them you called and try and get them to hurry, but they write down your information and ask you several questions like what Artem looks like, where it happened, what the attackers look like. They won''t be hurried and each time you try, they just tell you to calm down and answer their questions. In frustration, you finally answer all their questions while they write it all down.'
-											*nl
-											'By the time they finish you see Artem limping towards you. He smiles through busted bloody lips when he sees you. You rush over to him and help him walk, putting one of his arms over your shoulder. Artem wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you have to see him like this. "I''m glad you got away, they said they were going to rape you if they caught you." Before you can help him more the police walk over and help Artem over to their car and start asking him questions. They tell you to leave and go home, you try and resist but they warn you this is no place for a young lady and you can tell you will just make things worse if you stay so you walk home.'
+											'Once you''re safe, you pull out your phone and call the police, telling them that the gopniks are assaulting Artem and tried to attack you as well. After you give them all the details you can, you hang up. Almost half an hour later, a police car pulls up at the entrance of the park and two officers get out. You hurry over to them and try and get them to hurry, but they write down your information and ask you several questions. They won''t be hurried and each time you try, they just tell you to calm down and answer their questions. In frustration, you finally answer all their questions while they write it all down.'
+											'By the time they finish, you see Artem limping towards you. He smiles through busted bloody lips when he sees you. You rush over to him and help him walk, putting one of his arms over your shoulder as he wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you have to see him like this. "I''m glad you got away. They said they were going to rape you if they caught you."' 
+											'Before you can help him, the police walk over and help Artem over to their car before they start asking him questions. They tell you go home, warning you that this is no place for a young lady such as yourself.'
 											act 'Home': gt 'korrPar'
 										end
 									else
 										minut += 10
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/caught.jpg"></center>'
-										'You are not in great shape and you are not good at running, you don''t make it very far when one of them tackles you to the ground knocking the wind out of you. Leaving you gasping for breath on the ground under him.'
-										'By now the other gopniks have caught up and now you are surrounded again, except now they are pissed off as well.'
-										'The leader drops to his knees and grabs you by the hair while you lie flat on your stomach: "We warned you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Since you made us work for it, we are just going to take what we want."'
-										'You know your choices are limited, get raped or fight back and likely get the shit beat out of you and raped anyways.'
+										'You''re not in great shape and aren''t good at running, so you don''t make it very far when one of them tackles you to the ground, knocking the wind out of you.'
+										'By now, the other gopniks have caught up and you''re surrounded again. The leader drops to his knees and grabs you by the hair while you lie flat on your stomach. "We warned you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Since you made us work for it, we''re just going to take what we want."'
+										'You could try and fight them off, but you''re likely to just be beaten and raped anyway...'
 										act 'Get raped': gt 'artem_date_events', 'gang_rape'
 										gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'hard'
 										if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -390,8 +395,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow_bang':
 	*clr & cla
 	gs 'fame', 'pav', 'sex', 20
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/ggbj1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You quickly glance around you and realize there''s no way you can get past them and outrun them all. With a deep sigh, you drop to your knees and reach out for one of the exposed cocks the Gopniks are already shoving in your face.'
-	'Two of the Gopniks leave you and go away to keep an eye out, satisfied that you can''t run away from this position without their friends easily stopping you. The other four all offer you their cocks, you start sucking on one and jerking two more off. The other one pulls out his phone and starts filming it.'
+	'You quickly glance around and realize there''s no way you can get past them and outrun them all. With a deep sigh, you drop to your knees and reach out for one of the exposed cocks the gopniks are already shoving in your face.'
+	'Two of the gopniks leave to keep an eye out, satisfied that you can''t run away without their friends stopping you. The other four all offer you their cocks, so you start sucking on one and jerking off two while the last guy pulls out his phone and starts filming you.'
 	gs 'pain', 3, 'hair', 'pull'
 	gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 	gs 'boystat', $boy1
@@ -402,7 +407,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow_bang':
 	act 'Get face fucked':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/ggbj2.jpg"></center>'
-		'For a few seconds you try to give the first guy a blowjob, but it''s quite obvious they don''t need your cooperation. Another guy roughly grabs you buy the hair and pulls your head towards his dick and roughly shoves his dick down your throat and then begins to thrust his hips against your face, roughly fucking your throat while he keeps your head in place by holding onto your hair. They take turns on who is filming.'
+		'You try giving the first guy a blowjob, but it''s quite obvious they don''t need your cooperation. Another guy roughly grabs you by the hair and pulls your head towards his dick, roughly shoving it down your throat before he starts roughly fucking your mouth. They take turns filming as they pass you around.'
 		gs 'pain', 3, 'hair', 'pull'
 		gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 		gs 'pain', 6, 'throat', 'stretch'
@@ -414,7 +419,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow_bang':
 		act 'Swallow it':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/ggcum1.jpg"></center>'
-			'Suddenly you feel his cum splashing against the back of your mouth, he doesn''t stop face fucking you until he stops coming, you don''t have time to catch your breath, as soon as he pulls his dick out, another one is shoved back in your mouth.'
+			'After a while, you suddenly feel cum splashing against the back of your mouth, but he doesn''t stop face fucking you until he stops. You don''t have time to catch your breath because as soon as he pulls his dick out, another is shoved in your mouth.'
 			gs 'pain', 3, 'hair', 'pull'
 			gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 			gs 'pain', 6, 'throat', 'stretch'
@@ -427,7 +432,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow_bang':
 			act 'Keep swallowing':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/ggcum2.jpg"></center>'
-				'They run a train on your face, and you''re never without a cock in your mouth for long. As soon as one guy finishes, shoots his load in your mouth, the next one takes over. After what feels like forever the third guy finally finishes, the two that went to keep watch have come over and have their dicks out now, apparently the first two finished and went and relieved them.'
+				'As soon as one guy finishes, the next one takes over. After what feels like forever, the third guy finally finishes, and the two that went to keep watch have come over and have their their dicks out.'
 				gs 'pain', 3, 'hair', 'pull'
 				gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 				gs 'pain', 6, 'throat', 'stretch'
@@ -441,7 +446,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow_bang':
 				act 'Blowbang':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/ggbj3.jpg"></center>'
-					'They keep pulling a train on your face, and you''re never without a cock in your mouth for long. As soon as one guy finishes, shoots his load in your mouth, the next one takes over, you never have time to spit their cum out so you have no choice but to swallow. After what feels like forever the fourth and fifth guy finally finishes, your throat feels sore. The rest have put their dicks away and the last guy who was relieved from keeping watch fucks your mouth.'
+					'The fourth and fifth guy take their turns with you, leaving your throat feeling sore.'
 					gs 'pain', 3, 'hair', 'pull'
 					gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 					gs 'pain', 6, 'throat', 'stretch'
@@ -455,7 +460,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow_bang':
 					act 'Last one':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/ggcum3.jpg"></center>'
-						'With finally just one left, you can finally stop also giving hand jobs, your hands feel like they are cramped up from the all the hand jobs you have given and your throat feels raw. The last one unlike his friends pulls his dick out just as he starts to cum and spurts her sperm all over you nose and lips. As it drips down onto your chin, the one currently filming gets a close up of your cum covered face as the Gopniks all gather around for one last laugh. Then they leave you and Artem be. Artem quietly helps you put your clothes back on before walking you home.'
+						'With just one left, you can finally stop giving handjobs, your hands having cramped up. The last one, unlike his friends, pulls his dick out just as he starts to cum and spurts his cum all over your face. As it drips down onto your chin, the one currently filming gets a close up of you as the gopniks all gather round for one last laugh before they leave you and Artem be.'
 						gs 'pain', 3, 'hair', 'pull'
 						gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 						gs 'pain', 6, 'throat', 'stretch'
@@ -467,9 +472,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow_bang':
 						act 'Go home':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/walk_save.jpg"></center>'
-							'As the Gopniks leave you put your clothes back on. Artem gets up slowly and wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you have to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home. Once you get him home, you help him to bed. "You shouldn''t have done that, it was disgusting."'
-							'You smile to him. "I couldn''t let them hurt you like that."'
-							'He frowns. "I would have healed, anyways I could use some rest, so can you please leave." He rolls over obviously not wanting to talk anymore. So you get up and leave.'
+							'As the gopniks leave you put your clothes back on, Artem slowly gets up and wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you have to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home.'
+							'Once you get him home, you help him to bed. "You shouldn''t have done that, <<$pcs_nickname>>. It was disgusting."'
+							'You smile at him. "I couldn''t let them hurt you like that."'
+							'He frowns. "I would have healed! Anyway, I could use some rest, so can you please leave?" He rolls over, obviously not wanting to talk anymore, so you get up and leave.'
 							minut += 5
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Leave': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_1'
@@ -485,21 +491,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fight_gang':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/walkgop.jpg"></center>'
 	'You glare at them. "Fuck you, I''ll kill any of you that touch me."'
-	'They all laugh at that and obviously don''t believe you, as one of them reaches out to grab you. You quickly punch him in the stomach which causes him to oof and step back, obviously surprised you are actually willing to fight back. Artem seeing this gets up and says. "Leave her alone!" It was a chivalrous effort but one in vain. He never even makes it back full standing when two of the gopniks start wailing on him and he goes down in a heap where they start kicking him. The rest come for you.'
+	'They all laugh as one of them reaches out to grab you. You quickly punch him in the stomach, which causes him to step back, surprised you''re actually willing to fight back. Seeing this, Artem gets up. "Leave her alone!" It was a chivalrous effort, but one in vain. He never even makes it onto his feet before two of the gopniks start beating him and he goes down in a heap, where they start kicking him as the rest come for you.'
 !!fight code goes here, it is 6 adult men vs Sveta. I don''t see any way she could win, but I wanted to give the players the option, plus with magic that could change things. Below I am doing a version of if she wins and if she loses. 
 	if win = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/walk_save.jpg"></center>'
-		'You put on a demonstration of how to fight against several opponents at once. You use their numbers against them, constantly moving so they get in each others ways, then taking your shots in their confusion. It took awhile and they got in some hits of their own, but in the end you finally put enough of a beat down on them for them to give up. First one, then another just turn and run off and that is all it took. Soon, the rest turned tail and ran off as well. Leaving you huffing and puffing, still naked. You check on Artem who is barely conscious and moaning, then you get dressed. You help Artem up as he wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you have to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home. Once you get him home, you help him to bed. "I can''t believe you won."'
-		'You laugh and say. "I can''t either, but I couldn''t let them hurt you like that."'
-		'He shakes his head and seems to have mixed feelings on the subject. "Thanks, anyways I could use some rest, so see you later ok." He rolls over obviously not wanting to talk anymore. So you get up and leave.'
+		'You put on a demonstration of how to fight against several opponents at once. You use their numbers against them, constantly moving so they get in each others way, then taking your shots in their confusion. It takes a while and they get in some hits of their own, but in the end you finally put enough of a beat down on them for them to give up. They all turn tail and flee, leaving you huffing and puffing, still naked. You check on Artem, who''s barely conscious, before you get dressed. You help Artem up as he wipes the blood from his face, deeply embarrassed you have to see him like this. You walk in silence as you help him get home.' 
+		'Once you get him home, you help him to bed. "I can''t believe you won!"'
+		'You laugh. "I can''t either, but I couldn''t let them hurt you like that."'
+		'He shakes his head and seems to have mixed feelings on the subject. "Thanks anyway, but I could use some rest. See you later, okay?" He rolls over, so you get up and leave.'
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_1'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/fail.jpg"></center>'
-		'You do your best, but their are too many of them. The blows start coming and never stop, and soon you feel yourself dazed and unable to fight anymore. With the fight now over, you find yourself laying naked on the ground, flat on your stomach. The leader drops to his knees and grabs you by the hair while. "We warned you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You''re all ours now."'
-		'Several of them start to take off their pants as one of them threatens: "Open up whore, or we''ll be spilling your guts all over the ground."'
-		'Two of them go stand watch, while the other four gather around you, you know they are going to rape you but their is nothing more you can do about it. You silent pray someone would come by and save you as you start to cry.'
+		'You do your best, but there''s too many of them. The blows start coming and never stop, and you''re soon dazed and unable to fight anymore. The fight over, you find yourself laying naked on the ground, flat on your stomach as the leader drops to his knees and grabs you by the hair. "We warned you, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You''re all ours now."'
+		'Several of them start taking off their pants. "Open up whore, or we''ll be spilling your guts all over the ground!" one of them threatens.'
+		'Two of them stand watch while the others gather round you. There''s nothing you can do but hope that someone will come by and save you as you start to cry.'
 		act 'Get raped': gt 'artem_date_events', 'gang_rape'
 	end
 end
@@ -525,38 +532,38 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gang_rape':
 	gs 'artem_date_events', 'generatgopniks'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/stripped.jpg"></center>'
-	'They grab you and lift you off the ground, one covering your mouth as some others carry you. They drag you off deeper into the park into the woods far away from any of the paths. You see two others are dragging the unconscious Artem along. When they get to a place they seem to like, where there is some old dirty mattress laying on the ground, they start ripping your clothes off. It hurts as they do and you can hear your clothes ripping and tearing, they seem to be intentionally destroying your clothes at this point. They keep ripping and tearing at your clothes until you are completely naked. Two of them drop Artem nearby and then go stand watch.' 
+	'They lift you off the ground, one covering your mouth as they drag you off deeper into the park far away from any of the paths. You see two others are dragging the unconscious Artem along. You eventually arrive in a clearing with a dirty old mattress laying on the ground, where they start ripping your clothes off. Artem is dumped nearby and the two gopniks go to stand watch as you hear your clothes ripping and tearing, which they seem to be doing intentionally. They keep ripping and tearing at your clothes until you''re completely naked.' 
 	gs 'arousal', 'flash', 5, 'gangbang', 'rape', 'rough'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/bound.jpg"></center>'
-		'Two of them drop Artem nearby and then go stand watch, while the other four gather around you. The leader holds you down and puts a knees on your head. The second one helps holding you down, while the third watches and the last one ties your hands behind your back. By this point you''re too tired to resist and just let them have their way with you as they tie your hands tightly behind your back.'
+		'The leader holds you down and puts a knee on your head as another gopnik ties your hands tightly behind your back. By this point, you''re too tired to resist and just let them have their way with you.'
 		gs 'pain', 2, 'wrists', 'bind'
 		gs 'arousal', 'BDSM', 5, 'gangbang', 'rape', 'rough', 'bound'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'The nightmare begins':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/rape1.jpg"></center>'
-			'Two of them hold you down, while a third watches and the fourth pulls his dick out and shoves it in your pussy and starts hammering away not caring if you are wet or if you enjoy it. Hell, by what they are saying you think the more you struggle or cry out the more they are enjoying this.'
+			'Two of them hold you down while one pulls his dick out, shoves it in your pussy and starts hammering away, not caring if you enjoy it or not. The more you struggle or cry out, the more they seem to enjoy it.'
 			gs 'pain', 2, 'wrists', 'bind'
 			gs 'boystat', $boy1
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'gangbang', 'rape', 'rough', 'bound'
 			pcs_horny = 0
 			gs 'stat'
-			act 'Next':
+			act 'Continue':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/rape2.jpg"></center>'
-				'The one watching finally has had enough and pulls the one raping you off, he then forces his dick inside of you instead, while the guy that was raping you stands up and just watches as he jerks off.'
+				'The one watching takes his turn and forces his dick inside you while the first one just watches as he jerks off.'
 				gs 'pain', 2, 'wrists', 'bind'
 				gs 'boystat', $boy2
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'gangbang', 'rape', 'rough', 'bound'
 				pcs_horny = 0
 				gs 'stat'
-				act 'Too loose':
+				act 'Continue':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/rape3.jpg"></center>'
-					'You hear the leader say. "Alright my turn. Roll her over onto her hands and knees." You are roughly forced into a kneeling position on the nasty old mattress, with your face forced against it. You feel someone spit on your asshole and then a dick gets shoves up your ass causing you to cry out in pain, as he starts pounding your ass balls deep. "Much tighter than that gaping twat would be after you guys ripped it up." He laughs and the others join in.'
+					'"Alright, my turn," the leader says. "Roll her over onto her hands and knees." You''re roughly forced into a kneeling position on the nasty old mattress, with your face forced against it. You feel someone spit on your asshole before a dick is shoved inside, causing you to cry out in pain as he starts pounding you balls deep. "Much tighter than that gaping pussy after you guys ripped it up!" He laughs and the others join in.'
 					gs 'pain', 2, 'wrists', 'bind'
 					gs 'boystat', $boy3
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'gangbang', 'rape', 'rough', 'bound'
@@ -565,7 +572,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gang_rape':
 					act 'Two at a time':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/rape4.jpg"></center>'
-						'The leader pulls out of your ass and then lays in front of you on his side as someone else starts roughly fucking your ass now. Once he is next to your head the leader shoves his dick in your mouth and makes you suck his dick, as the other three take turns fucking your ass. You can feel one of them cumming in your ass. While another one of the them speaks up. "Come on she has other holes I am tired of waiting."'
+						'The leader pulls out of your ass and lies in front of you on his side as someone else starts roughly fucking your ass. Once he''s next to your head, the leader shoves his dick in your mouth and makes you suck his dick as the other three take turns fucking your ass. You soon feel one of them cumming in your ass as another speaks up. "Come on, she has other holes! I''m tired of waiting!"'
 						gs 'pain', 2, 'wrists', 'bind'
 						gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 						gs 'boystat', $boy4
@@ -575,10 +582,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gang_rape':
 						gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'Gopnik rapist 1', 0, 0, 10000, 40
 						pcs_horny = 0
 						gs 'stat'
-						act 'Airtight':
+						act 'Continue':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/rape5.jpg"></center>'
-							'With that, one of them lays down on the mattress and they force you to straddle and mount him, his cock sliding into your battered pussy, another cock is shoved into your mouth and a third back in your ass. As the two that has already came inside of you leaves, the ones who were on watch comes over and joins in, taking their turns. You feel one of them cumming in your twat.'
+							'With that, one of them lies down on the mattress and they force you to straddle and mount him, his cock sliding into your battered pussy as another cock is shoved into your mouth and a third back in your ass. The ones who were on watch come over to take their turns as you feel one of them cumming in your pussy.'
 							gs 'pain', 2, 'wrists', 'bind'
 							gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 							gs 'boystat', $boy4
@@ -590,10 +597,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gang_rape':
 							gs 'cum_call', '', 'Gopnik rapist 2', 0, 0, 10000, 40
 							pcs_horny = 0
 							gs 'stat'
-							act 'Overflowing with cum':
+							act 'Continue':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/rapecum1.jpg"></center>'
-								'The four left take turns fucking all three of your holes, so much you lose count and it seems like a lot more than six guys have taken turns on you, two more cum inside of you, one in your pussy and another in your ass. With them pulling out your feel the cum leaking out of both of your holes as they are over flowing with cum. Just as one of the other guys cums in your mouth.'
+								'The remaining ones take turns fucking all three of your holes so much that you lose count as two of them cum inside you. When they pull out, you feel the cum leaking out of both of your holes as one of the other guys cums in your mouth.'
 								gs 'pain', 2, 'wrists', 'bind'
 								gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 								gs 'boystat', $boy3
@@ -610,7 +617,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gang_rape':
 								act 'Last one':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/rapecum2.jpg"></center>'
-									'With only one left he starts fucking your throat, as he turns you onto your back. Before too long he starts to cum as well. He holds your mouth open with one hand and jerks off with the other cumming into your mouth and milking every last drop of cum until it falls into your mouth.'
+									'The last one starts fucking your throat. Before too long, he starts cumming as well, holding your mouth open with one hand as he jerks off with the other, milking every last drop of cum into your mouth.'
 									gs 'pain', 2, 'wrists', 'bind'
 									gs 'pain', 6, 'jaw', 'ache'
 									gs 'pain', 6, 'throat', 'stretch'
@@ -622,14 +629,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gang_rape':
 									act 'Aftermath':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/park/aftermath.jpg"></center>'
-										'They laugh as they get dressed again, and their leader grins wickedly: "Go home and get cleaned up. We have nothing against you, but remember this lesson, <<$pcs_nickname>>... it is better to know your place and do what you''re told, than to try and be something you''re not. All that does is piss people off and make them teach you a lesson." Then they leave.'
+										'They laugh as they get dressed again, and their leader grins wickedly. "Go home and get cleaned up. We have nothing against you, but remember this lesson, <<$pcs_nickname>>... It''s better to know your place and do what you''re told, than to try and be something you''re not. All that does is piss people off and make them teach you a lesson."'
 										*nl
 !! Artem doesn''t seem like the type to just leave Sveta at her door. Maybe this should be rewritten and Artem has Julia''s mom check her out (she''s a nurse). Something like Artem suggesting going to the hospital but Sveta not wanting to be known as the girl who got raped.
-										'You lay there naked for several minutes in pain, crying, after some time you feel someone grabbing your hands and you scream, trying to scoot away. Only to turn and see Artem behind you untying your hands. He takes off his jacket and gives it to you to wear, as your clothes are totally ruined. Then he quietly walks you home. Every step sends a spike of agony through your body but you keep going. Wanting to get away from the place where it happened.'
-										'When you get to just outside the apartment complex he stops. "Maybe we should call the police." You shake your head know, you know they wouldn''t care and just blame you and then everyone would know. He sighs. "At least go to the hospital." He says in a pleasing voice.'
+										'You lay naked on the dirty mattress for several minutes crying in pain before you feel someone grabbing your hands. You scream and try to scoot away, only to turn and see Artem untying your hands. He takes off his jacket and gives it to you to wear before he quietly walks you home. Every step sends a spike of agony through your body, but you keep going, wanting to get away from the place where it happened.'
+										'When you get to just outside the apartment complex, he stops. "Maybe we should call the police?" he asks, but you shake your head. You know they wouldn''t care and would just blame you, then everyone would know. He sighs. "At least go to the hospital?" he asks in a pleading voice.'
 										*nl
-										'Again you shake your head no, you don''t want anyone to know, you just want to go to your room and curl up in your bed. "No please just take me home." You plead with him.'
-										'He sighs and nods, then walks you inside and up the stairs to your door. When you get home he finally says something: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m so sorry. I know what you did for me and... I owe you. Big time. I don''t know what I can do to repay you, but if you ever need anything... please. I''m there for you." You don''t know what to say so you just nod and go into your apartment.'
+										'You shake your head again. You don''t want anyone to know, you just want to go to your room and curl up in your bed. "Just take me home, Artem!"'
+										'He sighs and nods before walking you inside and up the stairs to your door. When you get there, he finally says something. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m so sorry. I know what you did for me and... I owe you. Big time. I don''t know what I can do to repay you, but if you ever need anything... please. I''m there for you."' 
+										'You don''t know what to say, so you just nod and go into your apartment.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
 										gs 'stat'
 										act 'Home': gt 'korrPar'

locations/artem_events.qsrc

@@ -27,43 +27,42 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A2'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A2'']>></font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big2.jpg"></center>'
 	if kotovLoveQW > 0 and artemVitokQW = 0:
-		'You walk across the school courtyard to meet up with Artem. He gives you a friendly nod as you approach, and asks: "You ready to go?"'
-		'Just when you leave the courtyard with Artem to go study at his house, you run into Vitek Kotov. He doesn''t look pleased.'
-		'Vitek looks at Artem disdainfully and sneers: "Where are you going with that four-eyed loser, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
-		'You smile at him and reassure him: "Relax Vitek, Artem is tutoring me a bit after class. My school performance needs a boost, and he kindly offered to help me out."'
-		'Vitek frowns though, and says: "He ''kindly offered''... right. I don''t trust that freak! Just look at him, he''s eyeing you up and down constantly!"'
-		'Artem is getting quite nervous, and tries to appease Vitek: "Vitek, come on man! You know I would never do that! I''m only helping <<$pcs_nickname>> out with her studies, I swear!"'
-		'You can see Vitek''s body tense. He''s not buying Artem''s story at all, and looks at Artem with distrust.'
+		'You walk across the school courtyard to meet up with Artem. He gives you a friendly nod as you approach. "You ready to go?"'
+		'Just as you''re about to leave the courtyard with Artem, you run into Vitek, who doesn''t look pleased.'
+		*nl
+		'Vitek looks at Artem disdainfully. "Where are you going with this four-eyed loser, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" he sneers.'
+		'You smile at him. "Relax Vitek, Artem is just tutoring me after class. My school performance needs a boost and he kindly offered to help me out," you reassure him.'
+		'Vitek frowns. "He ''kindly offered''? Right.... I don''t trust this freak! Just look at him, he''s eyeing you up and down constantly!"'
+		'Artem is getting quite nervous, and tries to appease Vitek. "Vitek, come on man! You know I would never do that! I''m only helping <<$pcs_nickname>> out with her studies, I swear!"'
+		'You can see Vitek''s body tense up. He''s not buying Artem''s story at all, and looks at him with distrust.'
 		gs 'willpower', 'skill', 'force', 'chrsm_lvl'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-			act 'Reassure Vitek he can trust you (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
-				! I think passing this warrants some chrsm_exp. If you dont think so just remove this line
+			act 'Reassure Vitek (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 				gs 'exp_gain', 'chrsm', rand(0,will_cost)
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'force'
 				cla
 				artemVitokQW = 1
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You decide that you should step up for Artem, but also reassure Vitek you''re still with him. You need to be delicate about it, though.'
-				'You know Vitek well enough to know that he''s seething right now, so you try to placate him: "Come on baby, don''t you trust me? You know I''m your girl... Artem is only helping me get better grades, that''s all. We can still hang out later?"'
-				'That makes Vitek feel a bit better, and you can see his body relax a little.'
-				'Still, he drives his point home by punching Artem in the shoulder. He sneers: "You''re lucky, four-eyes. Still... if I even suspect that you''ve laid a finger on <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''ll put you in a wheelchair and have you pissing blood for the rest of your life! Got that?"'
-				'Artem is terrified, and quickly nods while he rubs his painful shoulder: "Yes, yes! I understand!"'
-				'Vitek leaves you be, and you go to Artem''s home with him to study. You can see Artem''s body still trembling as you walk down the streets.'
+				'You decide that you should step up for Artem, but also reassure Vitek you''re still with him. You need to be delicate about it though.'
+				'You know Vitek well enough to know that he''s seething right now, so you try to placate him. "Come on baby, don''t you trust me? You know I''m your girl... Artem is only helping me get better grades, that''s all. We can still hang out later?"'
+				'This seems to calm him a little, and you can see his body relax, but he still drives his point home by punching Artem in the shoulder.'
+				'"You''re lucky, four-eyes. If I even suspect that you''ve laid a finger on <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''ll put you in a wheelchair and have you pissing blood for the rest of your life! Got that?"'
+				'Artem is terrified, and quickly nods while he rubbing his shoulder. "Yes, yes! I understand!"'
+				'Vitek leaves you be and you leave with Artem. You can see Artem''s body still trembling as you walk down the streets.'
 				act 'Go with Artem': ArtemLoc = 2 & gt 'artemhome', 'artemroom'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Reassure Vitek he can trust you (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Reassure Vitek (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 		act 'Say nothing':
 			cla
 			artemVitokQW = 2
-			'You silently watch the two of them, and wonder if you should help Artem.'
-			'Suddenly, Vitek punches Artem in the chest, knocking the wind out of him.'
-			'Artem curls up into a ball and squeals like a girl: "Vitek, please! Don''t hit me again, please!"'
-			'Vitek leans over Artem''s prone body and scoffs: "Walk away, now. If I ever see you near <<$pcs_nickname>> again, I''m knocking your teeth out! Got that?"'
-			'Artem, still curled up on the ground, wails: "Okay, okay! I''ll leave her alone! Just please, let me go!"'
-			'Vitek gives him one more kick in the ass, just as Artem gets up. He growls: "Now get the fuck out of here, freak... before I change my mind!"'
-			'The terrified Artem quickly gathers his things and runs away from you, deciding it''s not worth the risk to help you. Vitek spits on the ground with a pleased grin on his face, and walks away.'
+			'You silently watch the two of them, and wonder if you should help Artem when suddenly Vitek punches him in the chest, knocking the wind out of him.'
+			'Artem curls up into a ball and squeals like a girl. "Vitek, please! Don''t hit me again, please!"'
+			'Vitek leans over Artem''s prone body and scoffs. "Walk away, now. If I ever see you near <<$pcs_nickname>> again, I''m knocking your teeth out! Got that?"'
+			'Artem, still curled up on the ground, wails "Okay, okay! I''ll leave her alone! Just please, let me go!"'
+			'Vitek gives him one more kick in the ass as he gets up. "Now get the fuck out of here before I change my mind, freak!"'
+			'The terrified Artem quickly gathers his things and runs away from you, deciding it''s not worth the risk to help you. Vitek spits on the ground with a satisfied grin on his face before walking away.'
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			act 'Continue': gs 'gschool_grounds', 'main'
@@ -71,18 +70,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	elseif fedorKozlovQW >= 10 and FedorArtemTalk = 0:
 		cla
 		FedorArtemTalk = 1
-		'As you leave the school courtyard with Artem to go study, Fedor stops you.'
-		'He looks questioningly at Artem and asks: "Artem, what''s going on? Are you taking <<$pcs_nickname>> somewhere? She''s with me, you know..."'
-		'Artem blushes, and says: "I know she is, Fedor. We''re just going to do our homework together. I''m tutoring <<$pcs_nickname>>, to help her school performance a little. She asked me to help her, by the way!"'
-		'You smile at Fedor, and pitch in: "I did ask him, Fedor. I really need the help for school, and Artem was friendly enough to help me out. We''re just studying together, nothing more."'
-		'Fedor sighs, but concedes: "Well... alright, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I don''t like you going with <b>him</b>, but I trust you."'
+		'As you leave the school courtyard with Artem, Fedor stops you. He looks questioningly at Artem. "Artem, what''s going on? Are you taking <<$pcs_nickname>> somewhere? She''s with me, you know..."'
+		'Artem blushes. "I know she is, Fedor. We''re just going to do our homework together. I''m tutoring <<$pcs_nickname>> to help her school performance a little. She asked me to help her, by the way!"'
+		'You smile at Fedor. "I did ask him, Fedor. I really need the help for school, and Artem was friendly enough to help me out. We''re just studying together, nothing more."'
+		'Fedor sighs, but concedes. "Well... alright, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I don''t like you going with <i>him</i>, but I trust you."'
 		'After that he walks away, and you and Artem leave the schoolyard.'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Go with Artem': ArtemLoc = 2 & gt 'artemhome','artemroom'
 	else 
 		cla
-		'You walk across the school courtyard to meet up with Artem and go study at his place. He gives you a friendly nod as you approach, and asks: "You ready to go?"'
-		'You smile: "Let''s go study!"'
+		'You walk across the school courtyard to meet up with Artem. He gives you a friendly nod as you approach. "You ready to go?"'
+		'You smile. "Let''s go study!"'
 		'The two of you don''t have much to talk about on the way there, and after a few minutes just decide to walk in silence.'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Go to Artem''s home': ArtemLoc = 2 & gt 'artemhome','artemroom'
@@ -93,7 +91,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/study.jpg"></center>'
-	'You spend an hour doing your homework together with Artem. He''s a very smart guy, and explains several things to you. At the end of the hour, you feel like you had a very productive homework session, and that you learned a lot from Artem''s tutoring.'
+	'You spend an hour doing your homework together with Artem. Being rather smart, he explains several things to you. At the end of the hour, you feel like you had a very productive session, and that you learned a lot from Artem''s tutoring.'
 	minut += 60
 	if lernHome > 1:
 		gs 'grades', 'homework', 'school', 'yes', 2, 1, 'A2'
@@ -110,7 +108,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 !!this triggers instead of the two above if pav slut is high enough
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/talk.jpg"></center>'
-		'After you finish your homework, Artem has a serious look on his face when he says: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, everyone in the school is talking about how much of a slut you are. With how much I''ve been helping you... I think it''s only fair you give me a little something in return."'
+		'After you finish your homework, Artem has a serious look on his face. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, everyone in the school is talking about how much of a slut you are. With how much I''ve been helping you... I think it''s only fair you give me a little something in return..."'
 		'You frown at him. "What did you have in mind?"'
 		act 'Continue':
 			if artemQW['anal'] > 0:
@@ -118,8 +116,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
 				artemslut = rand(1,5)
 				if artemslut <= 2:
-					'Artem stands up and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
-					'He looks at you expectantly: "Time for my payment, today I want a blowjob."'
+					'Artem stands and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
+					'He looks at you expectantly. "Time for my payment. Today, I want a blowjob."'
 					gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 						act '"No way!" (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -128,8 +126,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 							npc_rel['A2'] -= 25
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-							'You decline. "I am not a whore that earns her way with sex."'
-							'"Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me when I need it? That''s so not fair! We''re done... find someone else to help you. Good luck, with that attitude."'
+							'You decline. "I''m not a whore that earns her way with sex!"'
+							'"Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me when I need it? That''s so not fair! We''re done... Find someone else to help you. Good luck with that attitude."'
 							'You can tell Artem is seriously offended by your refusal, and won''t help you any further. Hopefully someone else can help you with your homework.'
 							act 'Refuse': gt 'artem_events', 'finalrefuse'
 							act 'Agree to suck him off': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_bj'
@@ -139,8 +137,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 					end
 					act 'Suck him off': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_bj'
 				elseif artemslut <= 4:
-					'Artem stands up and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
-					'He looks at you expectantly: "If you still want my help, I want more, I want to fuck you."'
+					'Artem stands and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
+					'He looks at you expectantly. "If you still want my help, I want more. I want to fuck you."'
 					gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 						act '"No way!" (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -149,8 +147,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 							npc_rel['A2'] -= 25
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-							'You decline. "I am not a whore that earns her way with sex."'
-							'"Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me when I need it? That''s so not fair! We''re done... find someone else to help you. Good luck, with that attitude."'
+							'You decline. "I''m not a whore that earns her way with sex!"'
+							'"Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me when I need it? That''s so not fair! We''re done... Find someone else to help you. Good luck with that attitude."'
 							'You can tell Artem is seriously offended by your refusal, and won''t help you any further. Hopefully someone else can help you with your homework.'
 							act 'Refuse': gt 'artem_events', 'finalrefuse'
 							act 'Let him fuck you': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_fuck'
@@ -160,8 +158,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 					end
 					act 'Let him fuck you': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_fuck'
 				else
-					'Artem stands up and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
-					'He looks at you expectantly: "I seen something in a porno I want to try, I want to stick it in your ass now."'
+					'Artem stands and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
+					'He looks at you expectantly. "I seen something in a porno I want to try. I want to stick it in your ass now."'
 					gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 						act '"No way!" (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -170,8 +168,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 							npc_rel['A2'] -= 25
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-							'You decline. "I am not a whore that earns her way with sex."'
-							'"Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me when I need it? That''s so not fair! We''re done... find someone else to help you. Good luck, with that attitude."'
+							'You decline. "I''m not a whore that earns her way with sex!"'
+							'"Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me when I need it? That''s so not fair! We''re done... Find someone else to help you. Good luck with that attitude."'
 							'You can tell Artem is seriously offended by your refusal, and won''t help you any further. Hopefully someone else can help you with your homework.'
 							act 'Refuse': gt 'artem_events', 'finalrefuse'
 							act 'Let him fuck your ass': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_anal'
@@ -184,8 +182,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 			elseif artemQW['sex'] >= 5:
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-				'Artem stands up and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
-				'He looks at you expectantly: "I seen something in a porno I want to try, I want to stick it in your ass now."'
+				'Artem stands and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
+				'He looks at you expectantly. "I seen something in a porno I want to try. I want to stick it in your ass now."'
 				gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
 				if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 					act '"No way!" (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -194,7 +192,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 						npc_rel['A2'] -= 25
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You decline, and he''s very offended by that: "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''ve already let me fuck you. Meanwhile, you... fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But now I can''t fuck your ass and you turn into a prude? That''s so not fair! We''re done... find someone else to help you. Good luck, with that attitude."'
+						'You decline, and he''s very offended by that. "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''ve already let me fuck you. Meanwhile, you... fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But now I can''t fuck your ass and you turn into a prude? That''s so not fair! We''re done... Find someone else to help you. Good luck with that attitude."'
 						'You can tell Artem is seriously offended by your refusal, and won''t help you any further. Hopefully someone else can help you with your homework.'
 						act 'Refuse': gt 'artem_events', 'finalrefuse'
 						act 'Let him fuck your ass': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_anal'
@@ -206,11 +204,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 			elseif artemQW['bj'] >= 5:
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-				'Artem stands up and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
-				'He looks at you expectantly: "If you still want my help, I want more, I want to fuck you."'
+				'Artem stands and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
+				'He looks at you expectantly. "If you still want my help, I want more. I want to fuck you."'
 				if mesec > 0:
-					'You shake your head and quickly tell him: "Sorry Artem... it''s that time of the month, we can''t."'
-					'He blushes a moment and then smiles a little. "That''s ok I can just fuck your ass then <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+					'You shake your head. "Sorry Artem... It''s that time of the month, we can''t."'
+					'He blushes, then smiles. "That''s okay. I can just fuck your ass then."'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Agree to have anal sex instead': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_anal'
 					gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
@@ -221,7 +219,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 							npc_rel['A2'] -= 25
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-							'You decline, and he''s very offended by that: "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''ve already sucked my dick. Meanwhile, you... fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But now I can''t fuck you? That''s so not fair! We''re done... find someone else to help you. Good luck, with that attitude."'
+							'You decline, and he''s very offended by that: "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''ve already sucked my dick. Meanwhile, you... fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But now I can''t fuck you? That''s so not fair! We''re done... Find someone else to help you. Good luck with that attitude."'
 							'You can tell Artem is seriously offended by your refusal, and won''t help you any further. Hopefully someone else can help you with your homework.'
 							act 'Refuse': gt 'artem_events', 'finalrefuse'
 							act 'Let him butt fuck you': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_anal'
@@ -238,7 +236,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 							npc_rel['A2'] -= 25
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-							'You decline, and he''s very offended by that: "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''ve already sucked my dick. Meanwhile, you... fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But now I can''t fuck you? That''s so not fair! We''re done... find someone else to help you. Good luck, with that attitude."'
+							'You decline, and he''s very offended by that: "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, you''ve already sucked my dick. Meanwhile, you... fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But now I can''t fuck you? That''s so not fair! We''re done... Find someone else to help you. Good luck with that attitude."'
 							'You can tell Artem is seriously offended by your refusal, and won''t help you any further. Hopefully someone else can help you with your homework.'
 							act 'Refuse': gt 'artem_events', 'finalrefuse'
 							act 'Let him fuck you': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_fuck'
@@ -251,9 +249,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 			elseif artemQW['stripsee'] < 3:
 				cla
 				if artemQW['stripsee'] = 0:
-					'Artem says a little shyly: "You know... I''ve never seen a girl naked before. Only on pictures. Maybe you could..."'
+					'"You know... I''ve never seen a girl naked before. Only on pictures. Maybe you could..." he asks shyly.'
 				else
-					'Artem says a little shyly: "I enjoyed seeing your naked last time, I want you to strip for me again but can you make a bit more of a show of it this time?"'
+					'"I enjoyed seeing you naked last time. I want you to strip for me again, but can you make a bit more of a show of it this time?" he asks shyly.'
 				end
 
 				gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
@@ -264,19 +262,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 						npc_rel['A2'] -= 25
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/talk.jpg"></center>'
-						'You decline, and he''s very offended by that: "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me? That''s so not fair! We''re done... find someone else to help you. Good luck, with that attitude."'
+						'You decline, and he''s very offended by that: "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me? That''s so not fair! We''re done... Find someone else to help you. Good luck with that attitude."'
 						'You can tell Artem is seriously offended by your refusal, and won''t help you any further. Hopefully someone else can help you with your homework.'
 						act 'Refuse': gt 'artem_events', 'finalrefuse'
 						act 'Agree to strip':
 							*clr & cla
-							 artemQW['stripsee'] += 1
+							artemQW['stripsee'] += 1
 							gs 'fame', 'pav', 'sex', 1
 							minut += 5
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/strip1.jpg"></center>'
-							'You give him a serious look when you say. "Ok ok, you want me to get naked for you that badly?"'
-							'He blushes but then he nods. "Yes I do, I think it is the least you can do for me."'
-							'You think it over for a moment and then figure why not, it isn''t like a boy has never seen you naked before. "Ok fine." With those words he grins hugely. You start stripping out of your clothes slowly teasing him as you do, you might as well have some fun with this.'
+							'You give him a serious look. "Okay, okay. You want me to get naked for you that badly?"'
+							'He blushes, then nods. "I do. I think it''s the least you can do for me."'
+							'You think it over for a moment. "Okay, fine."'
+							'He grins widely as you start stripping out of your clothes, slowly teasing him as you do. You might as well have some fun with this yourself.'
 							act 'Start stripping': gt 'artem_events', 'striptease'
 						end
 					end
@@ -285,20 +284,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 				end
 				act 'Agree to strip':
 					*clr & cla
-					 artemQW['stripsee'] += 1
+					artemQW['stripsee'] += 1
 					gs 'fame', 'pav', 'sex', 1
 					minut += 5
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/strip1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You give him a serious look when you say. "You want me to get naked for you?"'
-					'You see him visible swallow but then he nods. "Yes I do, I think it is the least you can do for me."'
-					'You think it over for a moment and then figure why not, it isn''t like a boy has never seen you naked before. "Ok fine." With those words he grins hugely. You start stripping out of your clothes slowly teasing him as you do, you might as well have some fun with this.'
+					'You give him a serious look. "You want me to get <i>naked</i> for you?"'
+					'You see him visibly swallow before he nods. "Yes. I think it''s the least you can do for me."'
+					'You think it over for a moment. "Okay, fine."'
+					'He grins widely as you start stripping out of your clothes, slowly teasing him as you do. You might as well have some fun with this yourself.'
 					act 'Start stripping': gt 'artem_events', 'striptease'
 				end
 			else
 				cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-				'Artem stands up and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
-				'He looks at you expectantly: "If you want my help, I want your mouth."'
+				'Artem stands and unbuttons his pants, pulling his stiff erection from his pants.'
+				'He looks at you expectantly. "If you want my help, I want your mouth."'
 				gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
 				if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 					act '"No way!" (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -307,7 +307,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 						npc_rel['A2'] -= 25
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/bj1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You decline, and he''s very offended by that: "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me? That''s so not fair! We''re done... find someone else to help you. Good luck, with that attitude."'
+						'You decline, and he''s very offended by that. "Look <<$pcs_nickname>>, I spent a lot of time and effort helping you out. Meanwhile, you... you suck off or fuck pretty much everyone who asks! But you won''t touch me? That''s so not fair! We''re done... Find someone else to help you. Good luck with that attitude."'
 						'You can tell Artem is seriously offended by your refusal, and won''t help you any further. Hopefully someone else can help you with your homework.'
 						act 'Refuse': gt 'artem_events', 'finalrefuse'
 						act 'Agree to suck him off': gt 'artem_sex', 'slut_bj'
@@ -321,17 +321,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'learn':
 	else
 		*nl
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/talk.jpg"></center>'
-		'After you finish doing your homework with Artem, you both put your books aside and relax for a few moments on his bed.'
-		act 'Talk for a bit': gt 'artemhome', 'chat'
+		'After you finish doing your homework with Artem, you put your books aside and relax for a few minutes on his bed.'
+		act 'Talk': gt 'artemhome', 'chat'
 		act 'Explore his room': gt 'artemhome', 'artemroom'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'finalrefuse':
 	*clr & cla
-	 artemQW['artemblok'] = 1
+	artemQW['artemblok'] = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/talk3.jpg"></center>'
-	'You shake your head. "Fine if that is the way you want to be." With that you get up and grab your stuff and head for his door. Just as you walk out his door he says. "I never want to see you again." You walk out of his room and down the hall to his front door.'
+	'You shake your head. "Fine, if that''s the way you want it to be."' 
+	'You get up and grab your stuff before heading for the door. "I never want to see you again!" he says as you head out.' 
+	'You walk out of his room and down the hall to the front door.'
 	act 'Leave': gt 'pod_ezd', 'etaj_1'
 end
 
@@ -339,26 +341,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'striptease':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/strip2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You do a little dance on your knees as you slowly undo your bottoms. Ever so slowly teasing him with out showing him anything yet but the hint of your panties. Then you slowly take your bottoms till you only have your top and panties on.'
+	'You do a little dance on your knees as you slowly undress, teasing him without showing him anything but the hint of your panties. You then slowly remove your bottoms, leaving you with only your top and panties on.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Remove your top':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/strip3.jpg"></center>'
-		'Next you start to slowly undo your top, you turn you back before he can see your tits, then with your top still partially obscuring your breasts you turn back around, moving the top around giving him glimpses of your nipples until you finally remove your top, showing off your tits in all their glory.'
+		'Next, you start to slowly undo your top, turning your back before he can see your breasts. With your top still partially obscuring your breasts, you turn back round, giving him glimpses of your nipples until you finally remove your top, showing off your breasts in all their glory.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/strip4.jpg"></center>'
-			'Next you start to slowly pull your panties down, almost to the point your clit is visible. Then you pull them up a little teasing him, while your panties just barely obscure your pussy. Finally you pull your panties down to your mid thighs, showing off your pussy in all its glory.'
+			'Next, you start to slowly pull your panties down, almost to the point your clit is visible before you pull them up a little, teasing him as your panties just barely obscure your pussy. You then pull your panties down to your mid thighs, showing off your pussy.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Get naked':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/strip5.jpg"></center>'
-				'You pull your panties all the way off until you are completely naked, you dance around a bit before you finally face away from him on your knees. Then you slowly bend over with your legs spread about, getting down on all fours. Giving a perfect look at your pretty pussy.'
-				'He looks like he is about to start drooling as he stares at your pussy, you give him a few more moments and then you get up and start getting dressed again. Once you finish dressing he says. "Thank you, but I need to do a few things, so perhaps you should go for now." You just smile as you can likely guess what he needs to do, but you respect his wishes and leave.'
+				'You pull your panties all the way off and dance around naked before you finally face away from him on your knees. You then slowly bend over with your legs spread apart, getting down on all fours and giving him a perfect look at your pussy.'
+				'He looks like he''s about to start drooling as he stares at your pussy. You give him a few more seconds before you get up and start getting dressed again.'
+				'"Thank you, but I need to do a few things, so perhaps you should go," he says. You just smile as you can likely guess what he needs to do, but you respect his wishes and leave.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -370,18 +373,18 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'artemdryhump':
 	*clr & cla
-	 artemQW['dryhump'] += 1
+	artemQW['dryhump'] += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/assjobc.jpg"></center>'
-	'You turn around in front of Artem, so he has a nice view of your butt. Artem carefully runs his hands over your ass cheeks, and you can feel him hesitating for a second. The he starts squeezing your butt and rubbing it with his hands. After a couple of minutes of this he places one of his hands on your shoulder and pushes you forward, you go with it and bend over. He grabs onto you and you can feel something hard pressing between your ass cheeks. When you glance back over your shoulder, you see him rubbing his erect cock against your clothes, at the crack of your ass.'
+	'You turn so he has a nice view of your ass. He carefully runs his hands over your ass cheeks, and you can feel him hesitating for a second before he starts squeezing your ass and rubbing it with his hands. After a few minutes of this, he places one of his hands on your shoulder and pushes you forward, bending you over. He then grabs onto you and you feel something hard pressing between your ass cheeks. When you glance back over your shoulder, you see him rubbing his erect cock against your clothes.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay',3
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/buttcumc.jpg"></center>'
-		'Mere moments later, you see him cum all over your butt, on your clothes! After he finishes, you can tell he is embarrassed by it, as he apologizes: "I''m sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I didn''t mean to soil your clothes. It felt so good I just couldn''t stop." He turns red he blushes so hard.'
-		'Just then you hear his mothers voice out in the hall, just outside his door. "Artem I need you to run a errand into town for me."'
-		'Artem freaks out and starts to panic. "Um yes mom, I will." He looks at you with a panicked looked, obviously afraid his mom almost caught dry humping a girl in his room. "I should really go do what my mom wants, see you tomorrow?"'
-		'You smile at him. "Maybe, I will have to see whats going on." With that you gather up your stuff and leave.'
+		'Mere moments later, you see him cum over your ass, on your clothes! Once he finishes, you can tell he''s embarrassed. "I''m sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I didn''t mean to soil your clothes. It felt so good, I just couldn''t stop!" He blushes so hard that he turns red.'
+		'You then hear his mother''s voice out in the hall, just outside his door. "Artem, I need you to run an errand into town for me."'
+		'Artem freaks out and starts to panic. "Um yes mom, I will!" He looks at you with a panicked stare, his mother having almost caught him dry humping a girl in his room. "I should really go do what my mom wants. See you tomorrow?"'
+		'You smile at him. "Maybe. I''ll have to see what''s going on." With that, you gather up your stuff and leave.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2
 		gs 'cum_call','clothes', 'A2', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -392,18 +395,18 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'artemdryhump1':
 	*clr & cla
-	 artemQW['dryhump'] += 1
+	artemQW['dryhump'] += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/assjobp.jpg"></center>'
-	'You turn around in front of Artem, so he has a nice view of your butt. Artem carefully runs his hands over your ass cheeks, as he does you pull your clothes off until you only wearing your panties from the waste down. You bend over for him and you can feel his hard cock pressed up against your butt crack. When you glance back over your shoulder, you see him rubbing his erect cock against your panties, at the crack of your ass.'
+	'You turn so he has a nice view of your ass. He carefully runs his hands over your ass cheeks while pulling your clothes off until you''re wearing only your panties from the waist down. You bend over for him and feel his hard cock pressed against your ass. When you glance back over your shoulder, you see him rubbing his erect cock against your panties.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay',3
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/buttcump.jpg"></center>'
-		'Mere moments later, you see him cum all over your butt, all over your panties, you can feel the wetness through them as his cum soaks into them. After he finishes, you can tell he is embarrassed by it: "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, it felt so good." He turns red he blushes so hard.'
-		'Just then you hear his mothers voice out in the hall, just outside his door. "Artem I need you to run a errand into town for me."'
-		'Artem freaks out and starts to panic. "Um yes mom, I will." He looks at you with a panicked looked, obviously afraid his mom almost caught him dry humping a girl in his room. "I should really go do what my mom wants, see you tomorrow?"'
-		'You smile at him. "Maybe, I will have to see whats going on." With that you gather up your stuff and leave.'
+		'Mere moments later, you see him cum over your panties; you can feel the sticky wetness through them as his cum soaks into them. He seems pleased once he finishes. "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, it felt so good!"'
+		'You then hear his mother''s voice out in the hall, just outside his door. "Artem, I need you to run an errand into town for me."'
+		'Artem freaks out and starts to panic. "Um yes mom, I will!" He looks at you with a panicked stare, his mother having almost caught him dry humping a girl in his room. "I should really go do what my mom wants. See you tomorrow?"'
+		'You smile at him. "Maybe. I''ll have to see what''s going on." With that, you gather up your stuff and leave.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2
 		gs 'cum_call','pantyrear', 'A2', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -414,18 +417,18 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'artemdryhump2':
 	*clr & cla
-	 artemQW['dryhump'] += 1
+	artemQW['dryhump'] += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/assjobn.jpg"></center>'
-	'You turn around in front of Artem, so he has a nice view of your butt. Artem carefully runs his hands over your ass cheeks, as he does you pull your clothes off until you''re naked from the waste down. You bend over for him and you can feel his hard cock pressed between your butt cheeks. When you glance back over your shoulder, you see him rubbing his erect cock between your ass cheeks as he pushes them together.'
+	'You turn so he has a nice view of your ass. He carefully runs his hands over your ass cheeks while pulling your clothes off until you''re naked from the waist down. You bend over for him and feel his hard cock pressed between your ass cheeks. When you glance back over your shoulder, you see him rubbing his erect cock between your ass cheeks as he pushes them together.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/artem/sex/buttcumn.jpg"></center>'
-		'Mere moments later, you see him cum all over your naked butt and lower back. After he finishes, you can tell he is embarrassed by it: "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, it felt so good." He turns red he blushes so hard.'
-		'Just then you hear his mothers voice out in the hall, just outside his door. "Artem I need you to run a errand into town for me."'
-		'Artem freaks out and starts to panic. "Um yes mom, I will." He looks at you with a panicked looked, obviously afraid his mom almost caught dry humping a girl in his room. "I should really go do what my mom wants, see you tomorrow?"'
-		'You smile at him. "Maybe, I will have to see whats going on." With that you gather up your stuff and leave.'
+		'Mere moments later, you see him cum over your naked ass and lower back. He seems pleased once he finishes. "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, it felt so good!"'
+		'You then hear his mother''s voice out in the hall, just outside his door. "Artem, I need you to run an errand into town for me."'
+		'Artem freaks out and starts to panic. "Um yes mom, I will!" He looks at you with a panicked stare, his mother having almost caught him dry humping a half naked girl in his room. "I should really go do what my mom wants. See you tomorrow?"'
+		'You smile at him. "Maybe. I''ll have to see what''s going on." With that, you gather up your stuff and leave.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2
 		gs 'cum_call','butt', 'A2', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'