Cleaned up text in abduction events. (Content is in need of a major rewrite)

locations/abduction.qsrc

@@ -9,14 +9,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	menu_off = 1
 	i = rand(1, 2)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/girltocar<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'Suddenly you hear someone come up from behind, and you feel something hit your head.  Your vision goes black...'
+	'You suddenly hear what sounds like someone coming up to you from behind, but before you can turn and look, you feel something hit your head hard. You stumble as your vision goes black...'
 	act 'Pass out':gt 'abduction', 'abdCarTrunk'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCarTrunk':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/trunkint1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You wake up in a very tight, dark place. You can feel that it is probably a car and you are most likely in the trunk.'
+	'You wake up in a very tight, dark place. You quickly realize that you''re in the trunk of a moving car.'
 	'You try to kick the walls with your feet, but after a while you can see it''s pointless.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoomFirstEntry'
 end
@@ -34,14 +34,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRoomFirstChaining':
 	*clr & cla
 	i = rand(1, 5)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/shackled<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'You''re thrown onto a dirty bed. The man forcibly removes your clothes and puts wrist and ankle shackles on you. He slaps a collar around your neck then leashes you to the wall.'
-	'"You must have really pissed someone off girl," he says.'
+	'You''re thrown onto a dirty bed. The man forcibly undresses you before shackling your wrists and ankles. He then slaps a collar around your neck before chaining you to the wall.'
+	'"You must have really pissed someone off girl." he says.'
 	'"What is this place? What are you going to do to me?" you ask.'
 	'"This is where girls are brought to be trained as sex slaves!"'
 	'"... but... how... no..."'
-	'"Shut up slut. Usually, we torture you for fun and for as long as we want. When you''ve become broken enough, then we sell you to the highest bidder."'
+	'"Shut up slut. Usually, we torture you for fun and for as long as we want. Once you break, we sell you to the highest bidder."'
 	'"You cannot do this to me! It''s illegal!'
-	'"Ha! Who do you think are our best customers? They are politicians, police officers, businessmen... We have our cover, so you should shut up and get used to it!"'
+	'"Ha! Who do you think are our best customers? Politicians, police officers, businessmen... We have our cover, so you should shut up and get used to it!"'
 	'The man leaves without saying another word as you tearfully sob and yell for him to come back...'
 	gs 'underwear', 'remove'
 	painkiller_bak = painkiller
@@ -87,7 +87,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRoom':
 	menu_off = 0
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/basement1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are in a dark basement that has only one window and some lights. A chain holds you to the wall and is connected to your collar.'
+	'You are in a dark basement that has only one window and some lights. You are chained to the wall like a dog, a collar wrapped tightly around your neck while cold metal shackles also dig painfully into your wrists and ankles.'
 	'You can only move a few meters from the wall to reach several things left for you by your abductors.'
 
 	act 'Look around':gt 'abduction', 'abdFood'
@@ -106,7 +106,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSomeoneComing':
 	minut += 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/downstairs2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You hear the sounds of footsteps that get louder every step that comes closer to you. Their sound begins at the top of the stairs.'
+	'You hear the sounds of footsteps that get louder with every step that comes closer to you. Their sound begins at the top of the stairs.'
 
 	if pcs_leghair > 3 or pcs_pubes > 3:
 		minut += 20
@@ -121,15 +121,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSomeoneComing':
 
 	if broken = 0 and rapeCount = 0 and tortureCount = 0 and examed = 0:
 		*nl
-		'The man comes up to you. He grabs your leash and forcibly puts a blindfold on your head to cover your eyes.'
+		'The man comes up to you. He grabs your chain and forcibly puts a blindfold on your head to cover your eyes.'
 		'He leads you up the stairs as you feel a breath of fresh air that sensually caresses your bare skin.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExamStart'
 	else
 		if broken = 0:
-			'Your body starts to tremble in fear of what is going to happen next.'
-			act 'Cower in fear on your bed':gt 'abduction', 'abdRape'
+			'You fearfully back away from the man and curl up against the wall, your body trembling in fear of what is going to happen next.'
+			act 'Cower in fear':gt 'abduction', 'abdRape'
 			
-			if rapeCount >= 5: act 'Plead that you cannot bear any more rough treatment':gt 'abduction', 'abdBreak1'
+			if rapeCount >= 5: act 'Plead that you cannot take any more':gt 'abduction', 'abdBreak1'
 		else
 		
 		end
@@ -173,9 +173,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExamStart':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/examroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your blindfold is removed... You find yourself in a small room that''s painted white. The light is very bright and blinds you to where you can barely see.'
+	'Your blindfold is removed. You find yourself in a small room that''s painted white. The light is very bright and blinds you to the point where you can barely see.'
 	'As your eyes adjust, you can see that it is some kind of examination room. It distinctly reminds you of a gynecologist''s office.'
-	'"Sit on the exam chair," the man orders you.'
+	'"Sit." the man sternly orders.'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'hard'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -195,12 +195,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExamResist':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/examslap.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Due to being scared of what they''ll do, you start yelling and shaking to get loose of the leash.'
-	'Your captor is very strong, on top of your leash and cuffs that make your attempt to escape futile.'
-	'He grabs you by the leash, which knocks you down to the ground. He slaps your face hard and leaves it stinging with a red hand mark across the cheek.'
-	'"You''re only making it harder bitch."'
-	'With these words, he picks you up like you weigh nothing and slams you into the chair then restrains you.'
-	'He, calmly, sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
+	'Terrified of what they''ll do, you start yelling and clawing at your collar, trying desperately to escape.'
+	'However, your captor''s strength, along with your tightly adjusted cuffs, make your attempt to escape futile.'
+	'He yanks roughly on your chain, which pulls you to the ground in front of him. He slaps your face hard and leaves it stinging with a red handmark across your cheek.'
+	'"You''re only making it harder bitch!!" he yells in your face, before effortlessly picking you up and slamming you into the chair. He removes your shackles before tightly restraining you.'
+	'He then calmly sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExam1'
 end
 
@@ -208,9 +207,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExamObey':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/examsit.jpg"></center>'
-	'Willingly, like the slave you obviously have just become, you climb up onto the chair and sit there. You wonder what perverse things that are going to happen to you.'
-	'The man ties you up anyway, probably to make sure you don''t try to escape after they start. This makes you even more nervous.'
-	'He calmly sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
+	'Like the obdient slave you obviously have just become, you willingly climb up onto the chair and sit there. You wonder what perverse things are going to happen to you.'
+	'The man ties you up anyway, probably to make sure you don''t try to escape after they start. This makes you even more nervous. He also removes your shackles.'
+	'He then calmly sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExam1'
 end
 
@@ -218,24 +217,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExam1':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/exam1.jpg"></center>'
-	'A man enters the room dressed like a doctor, wearing a lab coat and suit with stethoscope around his neck. He walks, as if he''s unconcerned about you.'
-	'Obviously, He doesn''t speak to you, but rather to the man sitting in the chair. The doctor says, "Wow, a nice catch indeed."'
+	'A man enters the room dressed like a doctor, wearing a lab coat and suit with a stethoscope around his neck. He walks as if he''s unconcerned about you.'
+	'Obviously, he doesn''t speak to you, but rather to the man sitting in the chair. "Wow, a nice catch indeed." the doctor exclaims.'
 	'The doctor puts on a pair of rubber gloves then sits down on a small chair in front of you. He looks at your spread legs and what''s between them.'
 	*nl
 	'He continues to speak to the man: "She''s about <<age>> years old."'
 	if age < 18:
 		'"Geez, you like them really young don''t you?"'
 		'"Sure Doctor, who wants to fuck some old meat? The customers just love how the young ones squeal."'
-		'"Heh, I see."'
+		'"Heh, I see..."'
 		'He continues with the usual report of his findings.'
 	end
 	'He continues to examine every inch of you. "Regarding her usage levels:"'
 	'He shines a light in your mouth and says, "Her throat is <<$throattipe>>."'
-	'Next he feels a finger around your ass, "And her ass is <<$anustipe>>."'
+	'Next, he prods a finger around in your ass. "And her ass is <<$anustipe>>."'
 	'He pulls his finger out of your ass and finally reaches for your pussy.'
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
-		'"Oh, you''ll like this, her pussy is a virgin one."'
-		'"Looks like we hit the jackpot once again dear Doctor," says the man with a happy smile.'
+		'"Oh, you''ll like this. Her pussy is fresh. We have a virgin here."'
+		'"Looks like we hit the jackpot once again dear Doctor." says the man with a happy smile.'
 	else
 		'"And her pussy is <<$vaginatipe>>.'
 	end
@@ -248,7 +247,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExam2':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/exam2.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Now there, our little slave, we will make sure that you are healthy and ready to be trained."'
+	'"Listen here, little slave. We will make sure that you are healthy and ready to be trained."'
 	'He quickly injects all the solutions into one of your arms. The needle pricks your skin to hit the vein in the crook of your arm.'
 	'"The examination is now over."'
 	'The doctor leaves the room. The man puts your shackles and blindfold back on then leads you back down to the basement.'
@@ -266,9 +265,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenGiveTools':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosbag.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your master approaches you. It looks like he is holding something big in his hands.'
 	'When he steps into the light, you can see he holds some very large dildos.'
-	'"Hello, my newly broken slave. I have a gift for you," he says.'
+	'"Hello, my newly broken slave. I have a gift for you." he says.'
 	'You are rather quiet, because fearful thoughts of having these dreadfully big dildos shoved anywhere into your body make you feel like you might puke.'
-	'"Aren''t you glad whore? These dildos are here for you to train on, so you can perform better later in a "live" situation."'
+	'"Aren''t you glad whore? These dildos are here for you to train on, so you can perform better in a "live" situation."'
 	'"Uhmm... thank you Master."'
 	'He puts them down next to your bed and leaves without saying another word.'
 	if lactation['active'] > 0:
@@ -287,12 +286,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak1':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/questioned1.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Please... please! I cannot bear this treatment anymore! I''ll do anything, so just let me go!"'
-	'"You don''t understand bitch. You will leave this place in the end. As a broken sex slave or as a corpse."'
+	'"Please... please! I cannot bear this treatment anymore! I''ll do anything, just let me go!" you tearfully plead.'
+	'"You don''t understand bitch. You will only leave this place in one of two ways. Either as a sex slave - or as a corpse."'
 	'"But..."'
-	'"You will be sold to someone as their slave. If you won''t accept that role you will be utilized for the more perverted needs of our customers. Those girls usually don''t survive for long.'
+	'"You will be sold to someone as their slave. If you won''t accept that role, then you will be utilized for the more perverted needs of our customers. Those girls usually don''t survive for long.'
 	'A sense of dread washes over you as your mind races to think of what horrors might await you.'
-	'"Now, show me what a good sex slave you are."'
+	'"Now, show me what a good slave you are."'
 
 	tortureType = rand(1,3)
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'hard'
@@ -326,7 +325,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenGivePainkiller':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/pill1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your master approaches you, "You have been a good slave so far. Good slaves are rewarded."'
+	'Your master approaches you. "You have been a good slave so far. Good slaves are rewarded."'
 	'He hands you a single painkiller pill.'
 
 	act 'Take and swallow it':gt 'abduction', 'abdBrokenGivePainkillerYes'
@@ -361,14 +360,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenGivePainkillerNo':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/pill1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You see anger flash across your master''s face. "Refusing a gift? It seems like this slave slut needs to be reminded of her place."'
-	'He ties you down on top of the table then secures your head.'
-	'Some devious device is attached to your nose which pulls your head backwards. It forces you to open your mouth slightly.'
-	'Your master takes a clamp and pulls your tongue out. It tightly and painfully squeezes it.'
-	'He then secures the pill on top of a dildo and pushes the tip down your throat.'
-	'Your gag reflex activates, but he doesn''t remove the dildo for as long as you try to throw up.'
+	'You see anger flash across your master''s face. "Refusing a gift? It seems like this slave needs to be reminded of her place."'
+	'He ties you down on top of the table then secures your head. Some devious device is attached to your nose which pulls your head backwards. It forces you to open your mouth slightly.'
+	'Your master takes a clamp and pulls your tongue out. It tightly and painfully squeezes it. He then secures the pill on top of a dildo and pushes the tip down your throat.'
+	*nl
+	'Your gag reflex activates, causing you to gag and choke, but he doesn''t remove the dildo for as long as you try to throw up.'
 	'You almost pass out. Everything goes dark, and at that moment he removes it.'
-	'You have been forced to swallow the pill... but master still looks very angry.'
+	'You have been forced to swallow the pill, but your master still looks very angry.'
 	pain['killer'] += 1
 	broken -= 5
 	pain['tongue'] += 5
@@ -382,7 +380,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenAsk':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	'Your master responds, "Very good. What do you want me to do to you slave slut?"'
+	'Your master responds. "Very good. What do you want me to do to you slave?"'
 	
 	act 'Please fuck my mouth Master':gt 'abduction', 'abdBreak2FuckB1'
 	
@@ -400,8 +398,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckA1':
 	gs 'cum_call', '', 'Master', 0,'', spot, svol
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokena1.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your tormentor unchains you and throws you onto your dirty bed.'
-	'Spreading your legs wide apart you spit on your hand and smear it on your pussy saying, "Come, take me, Master."'
-	'"I like my bitches restrained," your master says and ties your hands and feet together, securing your position.'
+	'Spreading your legs wide apart you spit on your hand and smear it on your pussy. "Come and take me, Master."'
+	'"I like my bitches restrained!" your master says and ties your hands and feet together, securing your position.'
 	'His dick penetrates your pussy easily with the saliva doing its job.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 15, 'sub', 'bound'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -414,13 +412,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckA2':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'Master', 0,'', spot, svol
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokena2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Fucking you wildly for some time your master stops right before he orgasms.'
-	'He unties your hands and legs. He then ties your hands behind your back.'
+	'Fucking you wildly for some time, your master stops right before he orgasms.'
+	'He unties your hands and legs, then ties your hands behind your back.'
 	'Knowing what he expects you to do, you open your mouth wide and await his cock.'
-	'After some mouthfucking and gagging he cums in your mouth.'
+	'After some mouthfucking and gagging, he cums in your mouth.'
 	if broken = 1:
 		*nl
-		'"Very good, slave. You are on the path to redeem yourself." With these words he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location. He then leaves your room with the door closing behind him.'
+		'"Very good, slave. You are on the path to redeem yourself." Finished with you, he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location. He then leaves your room with the door closing behind him.'
 	end
 	broken += 1
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'bound'
@@ -436,7 +434,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckB1':
 	gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'Master'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokenb1.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your master unchains you and leads you to a device.'
-	'You can see that it''s meant to restrain a person in a laying down position with their head at the same height as someone''s crotch.'
+	'You can see that it''s meant to restrain a person in a prone position with their head at the same height as someone''s crotch.'
 	'You want to please your master, so you lie down on it straight away. You dutifully await the attaching of the restraints.'
 	'After your master ties you up, he walks up to your head. Your already open mouth is then roughly fucked by his member.'
 	'When he''s about to cum, he pulls his dick out and points it towards your face. You welcome the flying sperm with open eyes and mouth with your tongue out.'
@@ -453,10 +451,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckB2':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokenb2.jpg"></center>'
 	'Surprisingly, his dick is not wearing out. He moves behind you and starts to penetrate your ass.'
 	'You try to relax your anus as much as you can, so he enters you quite easily. Just a small reminder of pain goes through your muscles.'
-	'Fucking you furiously for some time your master cums deep inside you.'
+	'Fucking you furiously for some time, your master cums deep inside you.'
 	if broken = 1:
 		*nl
-		'"Very good, slave. You are on the path to redeem yourself." With these words, he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location. He then leaves your room with the door closing behind him.'
+		'"Very good, slave. You are on the path to redeem yourself." Finished with you, he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location. He then leaves your room with the door closing behind him.'
 	end
 	broken += 1
 	gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'Master'
@@ -481,7 +479,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscape':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/cellarwindow1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are looking at the only window in the whole basement.'
+	'You are looking at the only window in the basement.'
 	'However, there is a lock on it to prevent your escape.'
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -498,12 +496,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscapeWindow1':
 	gs 'stat'
 	breakChance = rand(1, 100)
 	if breakChance <= 50:
-		'You hear someone slam a door nearby. Maybe it''s your master is returning!'
+		'You hear someone slam a door nearby. Maybe it''s your master returning?!'
 		'You are so close to unscrewing the window! You decide to...'
 		act 'Run back to your bed and reattach your leash to the wall':gt 'abduction', 'abdSomeoneComing'
 		act 'Try to unscrew it desperately':gt 'abduction', 'abdEscapeWindow2'
 	else
-		'No luck the window is still screwed in very tight.'
+		'No luck. The window is still screwed in very tight.'
 		act 'Go back':gt 'abduction', 'abdFood'
 	end
 end
@@ -522,7 +520,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscapeWindow2':
 		failedEscapeCount += 1
 		act 'Panic':gt 'abduction', 'abdTorture'
 	else
-		'You did it! Just in time! Before someone managed to discover your actions, you manage to loosen the window and pull yourself through it.'
+		'You did it, and just in time! Before anyone can discover your actions, you manage to loosen the window and pull yourself through it.'
 		'As you land, you see some clothes hanging on a line. It looks like the clothes for 4 or 5 girls, but by luck one of the outfits is yours!'
 		act 'Run away':gt 'abduction', 'abdEscapeWindow3'
 	end
@@ -539,10 +537,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscapeWindow3':
 	'Pulling on your clothes as you run, you finally think you are far enough away and try to find your bearings.'
 	'Any underwear you had with you is lost, but that''s a small price to pay for your freedom.'
 	'You are in the middle of nowhere.'
+	*nl
 	'Before you in the distance, you see a shimmer of something that could be water.'
-	'If you turn back you can hear distant noise of what could be a highway.'
-	'On your left, you can see air dust and pollution of what could be a large city.'
-	'On your right, you see nothing, but something is pulling you that way.'
+	'If you turn back, you can hear distant noise of what could be a highway.'
+	'On your left, you can see the dust and pollution of what could be a large city.'
+	'You can''t see anything to your right, but something is pulling you that way...'
 	'You decide to...'
 	nroad = 12
 	minut += 180
@@ -581,11 +580,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFood':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/basement2.jpg"></center>'
 	'There are some water bottles and dried food beneath your bed.'
 	'A half broken, dirty mirror provides some means to inspect your appearance.'
-	'In the corner there is something remotely similar to a shower. It only has cold water though.'
+	'In the corner is something remotely similar to a shower. It only has cold water though.'
 	'There''s enough space to do some basic <a href="exec:gt ''abduction'', ''abdexercise''">exercise</a>.'
 	chainChance = rand(1,100)
 	if chainChance <= 20 and (rapeCount > 5 or tortureCount > 5):
-		'Suddenly you spot a loose link on your leash chain. You try to manipulate it, and you manage to free yourself from the wall.'
+		'You spot a loose link on your chain. You try to manipulate it, and you manage to free yourself from the wall.'
 		'<a href="exec:gt ''abduction'', ''abdEscape''">Go to the window</a>'
 	end
 	act 'Eat dried food (0:10)':
@@ -769,8 +768,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		pain['asshole'] += 8
 		pcs_ass += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/fistanal'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'Your hands and feet are tied with your ass being high above your head.'
-		'This is because you are hanging upside down.'
+		'Your hands and feet are tied with your ass being high above your head. This is because you are hanging upside down.'
 		'The guy starts trying to push his thick fist inside your anus. At least he used a bit of lubricant...'
 		'When your sphincter fails to resist anymore, you hear a loud pop as his fist quickly penetrates your insides.'
 		'He doesn''t stop there and pushes his hand deep. You can feel your intestines expanding as he opens his fist inside you.'
@@ -788,8 +786,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		'The guy starts pushing his thick fist deep inside your pussy. At least he used a bit of lubricant...'
 		'Suddenly, you feel his fingers touch your cervix. He''s doing it on purpose!'
 		'He''s pinching and pressing your cervix. You cry out loudly and try to shake him off, but you are bound. There''s no hope of success...'
-		'"What? Bitch, do you like it? I see that you do?" He stops pushing, but you can feel a finger brushing up against the cervix. "Should we penetrate another hole girl?"'
-		'"No, please... stop... just stop..."'
+		'"Do you like it, slave?" He stops pushing, but you can feel a finger still brushing up against your cervix. "Should we penetrate another hole girl?"'
+		'"No! Please... stop... Just... stop..." you plead through tears.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_fist', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
 
@@ -844,7 +842,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureA1':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturea1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are taken from your bed and led to the far side of the cellar. Suspicious looking rings and straps can be seen attached to the wall.'
+	'You are taken from your bed and led to the far side of the basement. Suspicious looking rings and straps can be seen attached to the wall.'
 	'Your hands are secured with a rope high on the wall.'
 	'Your legs are unpleasantly lifted above your head and secured as well.'
 	'Now you are hanging by your hands with your pussy and ass available for any perverted usage.'
@@ -904,7 +902,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB1':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb1.jpg"></center>'
 	'You are forced to the ground to lay on your stomach.'
-	'First your hands are tied together and raised on a crane high in the air. You can feel your joints being bent to their limits. Any more bending and your shoulders would pop.'
+	'First your hands are tied together and raised high in the air. You can feel your joints being bent to their limits. Any more bending and your shoulders would pop.'
 	'Your legs are then forced wide apart and secured on opposite sides. You cannot move an inch.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdTortureB2'
 end
@@ -930,8 +928,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB3':
 	pain['vaginal'] += 2
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb3.jpg"></center>'
-	'As soon as the whipping stops, you feel a new source of pain in your arse and pussy.'
-	'Something is being pushed inside both of your holes.'
+	'As soon as the whipping stops, you feel a new source of pain in both your pussy and your ass - something is being pushed inside both of your holes.'
 	'You are given no time to adjust, and both holes are fucked viciously, fast and deep.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -953,7 +950,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureC1':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturec1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your tormentor looks angry. Your hands are tied behind your back and your legs also...'
+	'Your tormentor looks angry. Your hands are tied behind your back and legs.'
 	'He attaches a rope to your feet - you are lifted like a pig to be cleaned!'
 	'After some minutes of just hanging, your tormentor comes at you with a leather whip.'
 	'He spins you around and whips whatever comes before him. Ass, back, belly, pussy, legs, tits. The whip hits your exposed flesh and leaves angry looking welts behind.'
@@ -1027,8 +1024,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured4.jpg"></center>'
 	'Finally he comes back.'
 	'You are unplugged, but your torture is far from over.'
-	'He says, "Suck me then this will end. For now..."'
-	'You have no choice, but to do what he orders you to.'
+	'"Suck me and this will be over. For now..."'
+	'You have no choice but to do what he orders.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 60, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1045,7 +1042,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD5':
 	gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'Master'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured5.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Even though your head is spinning and everything is aching inside you, you are able to make him cum in a few minutes of work.'
+	'Even though your head is spinning and everything is aching inside you, you are able to make him cum in just a few minutes.'
 	'Being bound, he shows you no remorse and fucks you raw before cumming in your very sore throat.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
@@ -1057,32 +1054,32 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBeSold':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'Master: "We have a buyer for you."'
+	'"We have a buyer for you." your master says with a cruel smile.'
 	act 'I do not want to be sold':gt 'abduction', 'abdConsiderSold'
 	act 'I want to leave':gt 'abduction', 'abdSoldSauna'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdConsiderSold':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'Master: "Are you sure slave? You will stay here and continue to be used.."'
+	'"Are you sure slave? You will stay here and continue to be used.." he asks.'
 	act 'Yes, that''s what I want':gt 'abduction', 'abdNotSold'
 	act 'On second thought, I want to leave this place':gt 'abduction', 'abdSoldSauna'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdNotSold':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'Master: "Very well. We will see each other soon again..."'
+	'"Very well. We will see each other again soon." your master says.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSoldSauna':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'"A nice lady from an established business" he smiles.'
+	'"A nice lady from an established business." he smiles.'
 	'You are blindfolded and led away to a car.'
 	'After some time, you are led through doors and finally the blindfold is removed. You are in a backroom of a brothel.'
-	'"The madame of the brothel stands before you, "I paid 8000 <b>₽</b> for you bitch. Don''t make me regret this."'
-	'"Yes, madame" you reply'
-	'"I''m not a bad person" she continues. "If you earn me at least five times more than what I paid, I may let you go."'
+	'"The madame of the brothel stands before you. "I paid 8000 <b>₽</b> for you bitch. Don''t make me regret this."'
+	'"Yes, madame." you reply.'
+	'"I''m not a bad person." she continues. "If you earn me at least five times more than what I paid, I may let you go."'
 	'With this faint sign of hope, she leaves you alone.'
 	workDolg = 40000
 
@@ -1141,7 +1138,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomer3':
 	pain['mouth'] += 5
 	pain['throat'] += 10
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailed3.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Continuing, he blindfolds you and attaches a ring gag, which stops you from closing your mouth. With you now completely helpless, you hear him walking away, leaving you to wonder what he has planned next.'
+	'Continuing, he blindfolds you and attaches a ring gag, which stops you from closing your mouth. Now completely helpless, you hear him walking away, leaving you to wonder what he has planned next.'
 	'After some time of relative quiet, you hear someone coming. In a matter of seconds, someone grabs your head. He pushes his warm cock into your mouth and down your throat, making it impossible to breathe.'
 	'You panic and freak out, but he doesn''t let go until you are on the verge of passing out.'
 	'Only then does he stop, not letting you escape into unconsciousness.'
@@ -1169,7 +1166,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerElectro1':
 	'Your restraints are removed, but you are led to a wall to be chained anew to a different device.'
 	'This time, you can see everything - but you wish you couldn''t.'
 	'Electrodes are taped to your nipples, clitoris, and vagina.'
-	'Your master takes a few steps back and pushes a button on a remote. In that moment, an electric shock goes through your whole body, making you shake like a wobbly gelatin.'
+	'Your master takes a few steps back and pushes a button on a remote. In that moment, an electric shock goes through your whole body, causing you to shake.'
 	'You moan loudly and beg for him to stop.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1209,8 +1206,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerElectro3':
 	'"If you are found to be more trouble than you are worth, one of our more perverse customers will pay us well for the opportunity to torture you to death."'
 	'You just nod that you understand and remain silent.'
 	*nl
-	'Your master leaves without another word - and you are left hanging on the wall!'
-	'You are tired, everything hurts, and there seems to be no sign of when or if at all you will be removed from this terrible bondage.'
+	'Your master leaves without another word - and you are left hanging on the wall.'
+	'You are tired, everything hurts, and there seems to be no sign of when you will be removed from this terrible bondage, if at all.'
 
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack'
 end
@@ -1274,11 +1271,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook4':
 	'Finally, you faint from all the abuse.'
 	'You wake up alone in the room, but your position has been changed while you were unconscious.'
 	'You are bound on some kind of a stool, hands tied together, and most importantly, your ass is lifted in the air and hanging by the hook.'
+	*nl
 	'You start to realize the pain of hanging by your asshole, so you try to push your legs up to move your ass even higher.'
 	'However, you can only remain in that position for a little while before you get tired and relax your legs. The pain quickly returns to your hook elevated asshole.'
-	'No one is near and you already know all too well that no one will take pity on you anyway...'
-	*nl
-	'You just have to wait hoping this part of your punishment will end soon.'
+	'Nobody is nearby, but you already know all too well that no one will take pity on you anyway...'
+    'You just have to wait hoping this part of your punishment will end soon.'
 
 	act 'Wait':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack'
 end
@@ -1289,9 +1286,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip1':
 	pain['labia'] += 5
 	pain['clitoris'] += 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Your master removes your bondage and in anger pushes you on the ground then spreads your legs.'
-	'"You fucking whore! I''ll teach you to be obedient!"'
-	'He starts to spank your pussy with his big strong, manly hand.'
+	'Your master removes your bondage and in anger pushes you on the ground before spreading your legs.'
+	'"You fucking whore! You''re going to learn how to be more fucking obedient!"'
+	'He starts to spank your pussy with his big hand.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1305,12 +1302,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip2':
 	pain['clitoris'] += 10
 	pain['asscheeks'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'After a while, he cools down, but your pussy is already red as a tomato.'
+	'After a while, he cools down, but your pussy is already red and stinging.'
 	'He grabs you by your hair and leads you to another device. You have to lie down on your shoulders and put your ass high in the air.'
-	'He affixes you into this uncomfortable position with some straps and pipes.'
+	'He affixes you into this uncomfortable position with some straps.'
 	*nl
 	'Content with how helpless and at his disposal you are, he grabs a rubber baton.'
-	'His hits you, especially targeting your exposed labia, slapping you very hard and causing intense pain to shoot through your body.'
+	'He hits you hard, targeting your exposed labia, causing intense pain to shoot through your body.'
 	'From time to time, he alternates, by giving your asscheeks an even harder hit.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1326,11 +1323,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip3':
 	pain['asshole'] += 10
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip3.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'As if baton wasn''t enough, your master reaches for a long dildo attached to a stick.'
-	'With one stroke he penetrates your dry ass and fixes the stick to the wall. The stick is not wooden... it is metal and very heavy, its own weight enough to push your guts aside as it presses against your intestinal walls.'
+	'As if the baton wasn''t enough, your master reaches for a long dildo attached to a stick.'
+	'With one stroke he penetrates your dry ass and fixes the stick to the wall. The stick is not wooden... it is metal and very heavy. It''s weight is enough to push your guts aside as it presses against your intestinal walls.'
 	*nl
 	'He then picks up a different weapon - a cat-o-nine whip that''s made of leather.'
-	'His target is the same - your poor labia and clitoris.'
+	'His target is the same - your now raw and heavily stinging labia and clitoris.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1348,12 +1345,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip4':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip4.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'After this even rougher punishment, you are on the brink of fainting.'
 	'Your master brings another device on a stick - a vibrator with a large head.'
-	'He buries the head nicely deep between your labia while touching your clitoris directly, your position ideal for this.'
+	'He buries the head deep between your labia while touching your clitoris directly, your position ideal for this.'
 	*nl
-	'When the device is turned on, you realize it must be on the highest setting. It almost makes you go crazy right away!'
+	'When the device is turned on, you realize it must be on the highest setting. It almost makes you orgasm instantly.'
 	'Your master leaves, and you are left alone with this device turned on, the anal dildo still pushing deep into your ass as well. Everything aches from this inhuman position.'
-	'You pass in and out of consciousness, every now and then having strong orgasms mixed with lot of pain. You shake like gelatin.'
-	'The only sounds in the room are your moans and the humming of the vibrator...'
+	'You pass in and out of consciousness, every now and then having strong orgasms mixed with a lot of pain. You tremble helplessly.'
+	'The only sounds in the room are your moans and the humming of the vibrator.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_vibe', 240, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1364,7 +1361,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/chainedback.jpg"></center>'
-	'After what seems like an eternity, you''re unbound and returned to your usual place, again restrained to the wall.'
+	'After what seems like an eternity, you''re unbound and returned to your usual place - chained to the wall.'
 
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
@@ -1423,7 +1420,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosSmall':
 	if pcs_vag > dildoSmall:
 		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 	else
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 	end
 	act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosSmallUse'
 	act 'Choose different dildo':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosVaginaGate'
@@ -1489,7 +1486,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosBig':
 		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosBigUse'
 	elseif pcs_vag <= dildoBig and pcs_vag > dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosBigUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your pussy apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1557,7 +1554,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalSmall':
 	if pcs_ass > dildoSmall:
 		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 	else
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 	end
 	act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalSmallUse'
 	act 'Choose different dildo':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalGate'
@@ -1589,7 +1586,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegular':
 		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegularUse'
 	elseif pcs_ass <= dildoRegular and pcs_ass > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus making it a bit deeper and wider.'
+		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegularUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your anus apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1690,7 +1687,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthSmall':
 	if pcs_throat > dildoSmall:
 		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 	else
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat making it a bit deeper.'
+		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
 	end
 	act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthSmallUse'
 	act 'Choose different dildo':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthGate'
@@ -1722,7 +1719,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegular':
 		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegularUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoRegular and pcs_throat > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat making it a bit deeper.'
+		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegularUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your throat apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1756,7 +1753,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthBig':
 		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthBigUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoBig and pcs_throat > dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat making it a bit deeper.'
+		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthBigUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your throat apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'
@@ -1790,7 +1787,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorse':
 		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorseUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoHorse and pcs_throat > dildoBig:
-		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat making it a bit deeper.'
+		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat, making it a bit deeper.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorseUse'
 	else
 		'You can clearly see that this dildo will tear your throat apart if it''s inserted all the way in.'

locations/abductionCustomer.qsrc

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGate':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'Your master approaches you, "Hello, slave slut."'
+	'Your master approaches you. "Hello, slave."'
 	'"I have a customer here who came to rent you for a while. Do whatever he asks of you."'
 	buyout = 0
 	act 'Yes, Master.':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGo'
@@ -10,7 +10,7 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGateBuyout':
 	menu_off = 1
-	'Your master approaches you, "Hello, slave slut."'
+	'Your master approaches you. "Hello, slave."'
 	'"I have a customer here that came to rent you for a while. Do whatever he asks of you."'
 	buyout = 1
 	act 'Yes, Master.':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGo'
@@ -22,9 +22,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGo':
 	gs 'stat'
 	i = rand(1,3)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/ledonfour<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Your master removes your regular chains and attaches a leash to your collar.'
+	'Your master removes your regular chain and attaches a leash to your collar.'
 	'You are led up the stairs into the house above your cellar.'
-	'When you enter the hall, your master orders you on your knees, "Kneel slave then continue on your four legs just like the bitch you are."'
+	'When you enter the hall, your master orders you on your knees. "Crawl on your hands and legs like the bitch you are!"'
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
 		'You are led to the room where your customer awaits. Your leash is handed to him.'
 	else
@@ -182,17 +182,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneelmaster.mp4"></video></center>'
 		'The customer is a <<$heightType>> <<$bodyType>> <<$raceType>>.'
-		'Kneeling in front of him, you look up into his eyes and see a <<$charType>> look there.'
+		'Kneeling in front of him, you look up and see the <<$charType>> look in his eyes.'
 		'You then look down and see his crotch directly in front of you. It''s obvious that he has something <<$dick_girth>> in his pants.'
 	end
 
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
-		'Your master tells the customer, "So this is her. You can be sure she''s a virgin as her hymen is intact."'
+		'Your master speaks to the customer. "So this is her. You can be sure she''s a virgin as her hymen is intact."'
 		'"I believe you. She''s not the first virgin slut that you''ve delivered to me, is she?"'
-		'"No, she definitely is not! How many has it been so far, four, five?"'
+		'"No, she definitely is not! How many has it been so far? Four, five?"'
 		'"In your establishment, I have paid for six virgins in total. This one is the seventh.'
 		if age < 17:
-			'"Good number. Good slut, too. She''s only <<age>> years old. I suppose her vagina will be especially tight."'
+			'"Good number. Good slut, too. She''s only <<age>> years old, so her pussy will be especially tight."'
 			'"That''s how I like it."'
 		else
 			'"Good number. She''s a good slut, too."'
@@ -201,22 +201,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 		act 'Sob and wait':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin1'
 	else
 		if buyout = 0:
-			'He is clearly expecting you to start working to pleasure him. You decide to:'
+			'He is clearly expecting you to start pleasuring him. You decide to:'
 			act 'Show him your beautiful body':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-show'
 			act 'Unzip his pants':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-unzip'
 		end
 	end
 end
 
+!! Scene is too long and has two images playing at the same time. Can this be split into smaller chunks please?
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/leonid/leonid.jpg"></center>'
 	'As you look up at his face, a chill runs down your spine - you know him!'
-	'You remember this man from one of the parent-school conferences. It''s Dimka''s dad, <<$bName>>..'
-	'And obviously he recognizes you too, "Oh... what the... who do we have here? Isn''t this the known missing person, <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>?'
-	'With a trembling voice only a few words leave your mouth, "Th...that''s me mister <<$bSurname>>.."'
+	'You remember this man from one of the parent-school conferences. It''s Dimka''s dad, <<$bName>>!'
+	'He recognizes you too. "Oh... what the? Who do we have here? Isn''t this that missing girl, <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>?'
+	*nl
+	'With a trembling voice, only a few words leave your mouth. "Th...that''s me mister <<$bSurname>>..."'
 	'"You do realize that the police have already given up searching for you. As if they made any effort though..."'
 	'"I-I don''t even know how long I''ve been here. The only thing I remember is being a plaything for these perverts..."'
-	'After these words there is a short period of silence. Despite the unexpected situation, you keep kneeling with your back straight and breasts jutting forward, as you have been trained so your customers have something nice to look at.'
+	'There is a short period of silence, but despite the unexpected situation, you keep kneeling with your back straight and breasts jutting forward, as you have been trained to do.'
+	
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneel2.jpg"></center>'
 	'Then suddenly, the look on <<$bName>>''s face changes from surprised to something else.'
 	'He comes up to you and gently caresses your face, "Plaything, you say? And do you like it?"'
@@ -239,13 +242,13 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout2':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneelmaster.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'"What a nice submissive slut you have become. What would your mother say about this?"'
-	'"I''d rather you didn''t let her know how I ended up."'
+	'"I''d rather you didn''t let her know how I ended up." you meekly reply.'
 	'"This establishment really gets the job done. I must commend the owner."'
-	'With these words, he leaves the room. You can hear an echo of a discussion between him and your master.'
-	'After a while, <<$bName>> comes back, "Let''s go <<$pcs_firstname>>.". He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
+	*nl
+	'He leaves the room and you can hear the echo of a discussion between him and your master.'
+	'After a while, <<$bName>> comes back. "Let''s go <<$pcs_firstname>>." He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
 	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I have never been in this part of the house before."'
-	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you. I paid for you. You are now my property. You are... my slavegirl."'
-	'Surprised. you can only think, "it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones."'
+	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you and you are now my property. You are... my slave."'
 	'You are still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into his trunk.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave'
 end
@@ -273,13 +276,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout3':
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefuckanalroughleonid2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are left lying on the floor with <<$bName>>''s cum still flowing out of your gaping ass.'
-	'He goes through the door. You can hear an echo of your master''s and his voices discussing something you can''t make out.'
-	'In a few minutes, <<$bName>> comes back, "I really like you <<$pcs_firstname>>."'
+	'You are left lying on the floor with <<$bName>>''s cum still flowing out of your gaping asshole.'
+	'You can hear the echo of his and your master''s voices discussing something you can''t make out.'
+	'A few minutes later, <<$bName>> comes back into the room. "I really like you <<$pcs_firstname>>."'
+	*nl
 	'He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
 	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I have never been in this part of the house."'
-	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you. I paid for you. You are now my property. You are... my slavegirl."'
-	'Surprised you can only think, "it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones."'
+	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you and you are now my property. You are... my slave."'
 	'You are still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into his trunk.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave'
 end
@@ -287,9 +290,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/garage.jpg"></center>'
 	'Stuffed inside of the trunk, you can only hear the sound of the engine and the pavement below as he drives you somewhere unknown.'
 	'After an unknown amount of time, the sound of the pavement stops, and the engine shuts off, leaving only silence.'
-	'<<$bName>> opens the trunk. Your eyes blink to adjust to the dimly lit area, and you realize that you are in a parking garage. There are no open spaces between the current level and the above one, so you think to yourself that this is underground.'
-	'You climb out still naked and collared like a bitch. It seems he doesn''t care about your feelings at all.'
-	'He takes your leash and leads you while you are on all fours up the stairs. You both exit through the upstairs stairwell door into a room that appears to be an office.'
+	'<<$bName>> opens the trunk. Your eyes blink to adjust to the dimly lit area, and you realize that you are in an underground parking garage.'
+	'You climb out, still naked and collared like a dog. It seems he doesn''t care about your feelings at all.'
+	'He takes your leash and leads you on all fours up the stairs. You both exit through the stairwell door into a room that appears to be an office.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'leonid', 'firstTime'
 end
 
@@ -297,10 +300,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin1':
 	minut += 10
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Your master leaves, and your body starts to shiver.'
-	'"Don''t worry slut, because this will only hurt a lot," the customer says. He is clearly enjoying himself.'
-	'You run to the far corner of the room. It''s a futile attempt to get as far away from him as you can.'
-	'He walks up to you and grabs you by the hair. He drags you as a painful, terrified scream emits from your throat to something that looks like a bench in the center of the room.'
-	'He forcefully yanks your hair to make you climb onto the bench like structure. He punches you in the stomach, and you collapse. He flips you over onto your back and binds your arms above your head with handcuffs. He follows with putting your legs into stirrups then follows with legcuffs to hold you in place. You realize that this gives him unlimited access to your virgin pussy.'
+	'"Don''t worry slut. This will only hurt a lot!" the customer laughs. He is clearly enjoying himself.'
+	'You run to the far corner of the room in a futile attempt to get as far away from him as you can.'
+	'He walks up to you and grabs you by the hair. He drags you as a pained, terrified scream emits from your throat to something that looks like a bench in the center of the room.'
+	'He forcefully yanks your hair to make you climb onto the bench like structure. He punches you in the stomach, and you collapse. He then flips you over onto your back and binds your arms above your head with handcuffs. He follows with putting your legs into stirrups, with legcuffs to hold you in place. You realize that this gives him unlimited access to your virgin pussy.'
 	'Your head is bound so that you have an unobstructed view on your own pussy. This is to ensure that you watch as he tears your terrified cunt apart.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin2'
@@ -309,8 +312,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin2':
 	minut += 2
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He starts to slowly undress, with his back to you to enhance your terror. With a clink on the floor, you can tell that his pants, holding a belt, have hit the concrete floor. He slowly turns around to face you, and you can finally see his naked body. His cock sways for a moment before stopping in front of your face.'
-	'"With renewed terror, you start to cry at the sight of his <<dick>> cm thick <<$dick_girth>> phallus."'
+	'He starts to slowly undress, with his back to you to enhance your terror. You hear a loud clink as his pants, holding a belt, hit the concrete floor. He slowly turns around to face you, and you can finally see his naked body. His cock sways for a moment before stopping in front of your face.'
+	'"With renewed terror, you start to cry at the sight of his <<dick>> cm thick <<$dick_girth>> cock."'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin3'
 end
@@ -324,12 +327,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin3':
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin4.jpg"></center>'
-	'He finally reaches for you and brings the tip of his phallus to the entrance of your virgin pussy.'
+	'He finally reaches for you and brings the tip of his dick to the entrance of your virgin pussy.'
 	'He covers his <<$dick_girth>> member in a thick layer of lube then starts to slowly press against the opening of your vagina.'
 	'With his hands, he spreads your pussy lips apart to help ease the entry for his member.'
-	'"Now behold girl. You are about to become a woman," he exclaims.'
+	'"Now behold girl. You are about to become a woman." he exclaims.'
 	'He pushes it in with a single long thrust that almost hits the bottom of your virgin cunt.'
-	'A terrible pain rips through your body, beginning where your hymen was and spreading like a fire. A trickle of red blood runs down the shaft of his cock.'
+	'A terrible pain rips through your body, beginning where your hymen was and spreading like a fire. A trickle of blood runs down the shaft of his cock.'
 	pcs_vag += 1
 	stat['vaginal'] += 1
 	pain['vaginal'] += 20
@@ -352,21 +355,22 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin6':
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin6.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'"And now whore you will receive your first cum. You will become the breeder you were always supposed to be."'
-	'As renewed tears streams down your cheeks, he spurts his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm <<dick>> cm deep inside your pussy. You can feel it hit your cervix, and you shudder at the thought of you getting pregnant from this monster.'
+	'"And now whore you will receive your first load of cum. You will become the breeder you were always supposed to be!"'
+	'As renewed tears stream down your cheeks, he spurts his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm <<dick>> cm deep inside your pussy. You can feel it hit your cervix, and you shudder at the thought of you getting pregnant from this monster.'
 	gs 'cum_call', 'pussy', 'deflowering pervert'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Cry more':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin7'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin7':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin7.jpg"></center>'
-	'He rests with his dick deep inside you for a while. He is enjoying the sight of your cries and the despair in your situation.'
+	'He rests with his dick deep inside you for a while. He is enjoying the sight of your cries and the despair of your situation.'
 	'"As his <<$dick_girth>> member becomes flaccid, it slides free of your abused pussy. He reaches out of sight and brings into view a dildo that looks almost exactly like his own dick. You think that it has probably been modeled from it."'
-	'"My cum that I just gave you is not meant to just drip out of you. You will receive another gift from me, one that will keep my present inside you."'
-	'With these words, he lifts your ass in the air so the cum doesn''t flow out then brutally shoves the dildo, shaped after his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock, all the way inside you. The dildo is pushed so deep into you that only its brightly coloured base peeks out of your abused hole.'
+	'"The cum that I just gave you is not meant to just drip out of you. You will receive another gift from me, one that will keep my present inside you."'
+	*nl
+	'He proceeds to lift your ass in the air so the cum doesn''t flow out, then brutally shoves the dildo all the way inside you. The dildo is pushed so deep into you that only its brightly coloured base peeks out of your abused hole.'
 	'He then takes some pieces of duct tape and wraps them over your pussy to cover your lips and keep the dildo firmly stuck inside.'
-	'He uncuffs you from the bench, but pulls your arms behind your back. This is probably to keep you from removing the shaft.'
-	'"Now run slut and enjoy my gifts even more," he leaves laughing.'
+	'He uncuffs you from the bench, but pulls your arms behind your back. This is probably to keep you from removing his ''gift''.'
+	'"Now run along and enjoy my gifts even more, slut!" he laughs before leaving.'
 	pain['vaginal'] += 10
 	pain['cervix'] += 10
 	pain['belly'] += 20
@@ -378,9 +382,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin8':
 	minut += 10
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin8.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your master comes in and finds you struggling on the ground. You are trying to shake the <<$dick_girth>> dildo out of you.'
-	'"Stop it... girl. You''ll just make it worse."'
+	'"Stop it girl. You''ll just make it worse."'
 	'He grabs your leash and leads you back down to your cell.'
-	'As you follow your master, the plugged <<$dick_girth>> dildo moves inside you causing you further unpleasant sensations and pain.'
+	'As you follow your master, the plugged <<$dick_girth>> dildo moves inside you, causing you further unpleasant sensations and pain.'
 	'Finally, you are back at your bed.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Lie down':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin9'
@@ -389,8 +393,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin9':
 	minut += 480
 	pcs_sleep += 70
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin9.jpg"></center>'
-	'Still having your hands bound, you are put on your bed and tied to the wall on a short leash.'
-	'Your master leaves, and you are left lying on the bed. Your vagina is still plugged by this <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dildo.'
+	'Your hands still bound, you are thrown on your bed and are once again chained to the wall.'
+	'Your master leaves and you are left lying on the bed, your vagina still plugged by the <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dildo.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Try to rest':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin10'
 end
@@ -398,16 +402,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin10':
 	minut += 15
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin10.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'The sound of your master coming downstairs wakes you up.'
-	'You must have fallen asleep from the exhaustion.'
+	'The sound of your master coming downstairs wakes you up. You must have fallen asleep from the exhaustion.'
+    '"Kneel and stick your ass high in the air slut."'
 	*nl
-	'"Kneel and stick your ass high in the air slut."'
-	'You are so desperate that you don''t even think about not doing what he orders you to do.'
-	'You just stick your ass as high as possible. It points so he has good access to both your ass and your ruthlessly plugged deflowered pussy.'
+	'You are so desperate that you don''t even think about not doing what he orders you. You just stick your ass as high as possible.'
+	'It points so he has good access to both your ass and your ruthlessly plugged, deflowered pussy.'
 	'Your master kneels down to remove the duct tape with a single pull. You yelp in pain from the tiny pubic hairs that get ripped out with the tape. He puts his fingers inside you to grab the stuck dildo.'
+	*nl
 	'Slowly, he takes it out. Remnants of your virgin blood and the customer''s sperm are smeared all over it.'
 	'Your empty vagina gives you a rush of relief as the cool air flows in to fill the void.'
-	'Your master unties you then adjusts your leash. As he leaves, he tells you, "Be glad that you can be deflowered only once you silly girl."'
+	'Your master unties you then adjusts your chain. As he leaves, he tells you "Be glad that you can be deflowered only once, you silly girl."'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
@@ -417,7 +421,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-unzip':
 	minut += 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	'You reach towards his crotch and slowly start to unzip his trousers.'
-	'Pressing your face underneath his crotch, you pull down his shorts and a <<$dick_girth>> member falls out. It lands directly onto your face with a slapping sound.'
+	'Pressing your face underneath his crotch, you pull down his pants and a <<$dick_girth>> member falls out. It lands directly onto your face with a loud slapping sound.'
 	if dick > 15 and dick < 25:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip1.mp4"></video></center>'
@@ -425,11 +429,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-unzip':
 	elseif dick >= 25:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip2.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock with horror. You image what terrible things this sizable penis will do to your tender body.'
+		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock with horror. You imagine what terrible things this sizable dick will do to your tender body.'
 	elseif dick < 15 and pcs_throat > dick:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip3.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'With relief, you look at his <<$dick_girth>> cock thinking that it''s nothing you can''t handle.'
+		'You look at his <<$dick_girth>> cock in relief, thinking that it''s nothing you can''t handle.'
 	end
 
 	if pcs_throat < dick:
@@ -448,7 +452,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-unzip':
 			act 'Force yourself on his cock (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	else
-		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you could take it all the way to the balls.'
+		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you could take it all the way to the base.'
 		act 'Suck the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckTip'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -483,7 +487,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 	if pcs_throat < dick:
 		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill level and you know you can''t safely swallow it whole.'	
 	else
-		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you could take it all the way to the balls.'
+		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you could take it all the way to the base.'
 	end
 
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
@@ -492,10 +496,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 		else
 			'Your customer is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
 		end
-		'Suddenly... without any warning, he takes a step back which pulls his <<$dick_girth>> member out of your mouth.'
+		'Suddenly, without any warning, he takes a step back, which pulls his <<$dick_girth>> member out of your mouth.'
 		'With an angry look in his eyes, he slaps your face very hard, which knocks you to the cold floor.'
 		'He jumps on top of your chest, and with a piece of rope, he ties you up.'
-		'"Even here, one must train the slaves himself" he shouts at you. He forces his <<$dick_girth>> dick all the way down your throat.'
+		'"Even here, one must train the slaves himself!" he shouts at you. He forces his <<$dick_girth>> dick all the way down your throat.'
 		'With your hands tied up, you are unable to resist. All you can do is struggle to avoid suffocating as best you can...'
 		act 'Endure':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckForced'
 	elseif $charType = 'neutral':
@@ -534,7 +538,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 			end
 		end
 	elseif $charType = 'kind':
-		'Your customer seems pleased by your sucking skills, so you continue to tease the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock. You look at him with as much sensual abandon as you can muster under the present conditions.'
+		'Your customer seems pleased by your skill, so you continue to tease the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock. You look at him with as much sensual abandon as you can muster under the present conditions.'
 		act 'Continue sucking the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuck'
 	end
 end
@@ -545,7 +549,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckForceself':
 	gs 'stat'
 	i = rand(1,3)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreblowjobselfforced<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Despite knowing you will probably hurt yourself, you force yourself on his <<dick>> cm long cock all the way down to the balls.'
+	'Despite knowing you will probably hurt yourself, you force yourself on his <<dick>> cm long cock all the way down to the base.'
 	'You start gagging, and saliva freely flows from your stuffed mouth. Your customer seems more content now.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'sub', 'rough', 'deepthroat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuck'
@@ -597,17 +601,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuck':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecockremoved.jpg"></center>'
 	'It seems the customer is done with fucking your mouth as he removes his dick then steps back a bit. He looks at you with a <<$charType>> appetite in his eyes.'
 	if charType = 'sadistic':
-		'"What should I do to you next bitch?"'
+		'"What should I do to you next, bitch?"'
 	else
-		'So how do you want it next love?'
+		'"So how do you want it next, slut?"'
 	end
 	'You are not entirely sure if he means that as a rhetorical question or not.'
 
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		*nl
 		'You want to answer him, but the moment you open your mouth to talk he slaps your face very hard. This knocks you down to the cold floor. Tears erupt from your eyes in response.'
-		'"You thought I really was interested in your slutty opinion?" He questions, laughing.'
-		'"A whore, and on top of that a slave whore, has no right to have an opinion."'
+		'"You thought I was actually interested in your opinion...<i>slave</i>?" he questions, laughing. "A bitch like you has no right to an opinion!"'
 		'You are unable to do anything except whimper like a small child. He ties you up, and you know that it''s going to get even worse now.'
 		vagOrAss = rand (0,1)
 		if vagOrAss = 0:
@@ -640,18 +643,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-decide':
 	vagOrAss = rand (0, 1)
 	if vagOrAss = 1:
 		if $charType = 'sadistic':
-			'"I will fuck your cunt raw, bitch.'
+			'"I will fuck your cunt raw, bitch!"'
 		 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckRough'
 		else
-			'"Let''s take your tender pussy!" He decides.'
+			'"Let''s take your tender pussy!" he decides.'
 		 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckNormal'
 		end
 	else
 		if $charType = 'sadistic':
-			'"I will fuck you deep in your ass, bitch.'
+			'"I will fuck you deep in your ass, bitch!"'
 		 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough'
 		else
-			'"I want to see how tight your ass is." He says.'
+			'"I want to see how tight your ass is." he says.'
 			 act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnal'
 		end		
 	end
@@ -662,13 +665,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-beg':
 	minut += 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorebeg1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Please be kind to me sir. I''m so afraid and sore... please!'
+	'Please be kind to me sir. I''m so afraid and sore... Please!'
 	if dick >= 15:'"I''m very afraid of your <<$dick_girth>> penis sir!"'
 	*nl
 	bekindChance = rand(1, 100)
 	endPunishment = 0
 	if $charType = 'neutral' or $charType = 'kind':
-		'Alright girl, you''re lucky that I feel generous today.'
+		'"Alright girl, you''re lucky that I''m feeling generous today."'
 		if vagOrAss = 1:
 			act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckNormal'
 		elseif vagOrAss = 2:
@@ -676,7 +679,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-beg':
 		end
 	else
 		endPunishment = 1
-		'A slave has no right to ask what will happen to it!'
+		'"A slave has no right to ask what will happen to it!"'
 		hardChance = rand(1, 100)
 		'"I will fuck you however I want, so shut up bitch!"'
 		if hardChance <= 50:
@@ -730,10 +733,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough':
 	else
 		'The man takes you by your leash and positions your body as if it''s just meat to be used.'
 	end
-	'What comes next is an excruciatingly rough anal fuck that clearly shows he has no regard for all the pain you have to endure.'
+	'What comes next is an excruciatingly rough ass fucking that clearly shows he has no regard for all the pain you have to endure.'
 	*nl
 	if assDMG <= 0 :
-		'Fortunately, his <<$dick_girth>> dick is not enough to damage your anus and intestines, no more than usual, anyway.'
+		'Fortunately, his <<$dick_girth>> dick is not enough to damage your anus and intestines. No more than usual, anyway.'
 		if buyout = 1:
 			act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumAss'
 		else
@@ -744,7 +747,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough':
 			end
 		end
 	elseif assDMG <= 2:
-		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your intestinal walls.'
+		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it slams against your intestinal walls.'
 		pain['asshole'] += assDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalDeep'
@@ -784,7 +787,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalDeep':
 	end
 
 	if (endPunishment = 1 or $charType = 'sadistic') and buyout = 0:
-		'"Now, I will feed you my seed you unruly anal slave."'
+		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, you unruly anal slave."'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
 	elseif buyout = 1:
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumAss'
@@ -830,7 +833,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckRough':
 	'The man takes you by your leash and positions your body as if it''s just meat to be used.'
 	'What comes next is an excruciatingly rough fuck that clearly shows he has no regard for all the pain you have to endure.'	
 	if vagDMG <= 0:
-		'Fortunately, his <<$dick_girth>> dick is not enough to damage your vagina, no more than usual, anyway.'
+		'Fortunately, his <<$dick_girth>> dick is not enough to damage your vagina. No more than usual, anyway.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound'
 		if $charType = 'sadistic':
 			act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
@@ -838,7 +841,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckRough':
 			act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumGate'
 		end
 	elseif vagDMG <= 2:
-		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you, and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
+		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you, and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it slams against your vaginal walls.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'rough'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -846,7 +849,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckRough':
 	else
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is insanely big for you.'
 		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix, or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
-		'He notice this too, realizing it''s why you''re groaning so loudly.'
+		'He notices this too, realizing it''s why you''re groaning so loudly.'
 		'Enjoying your suffering, he pushes his dick even deeper inside, and you squeal like a pig.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG * 2
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG * 2
@@ -878,7 +881,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckDeep':
 	'After about half an hour of deep vaginal banging, the man is about to cum.'
 	
 	if endPunishment = 1 or $charType = 'sadistic':
-		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, unruly fuck slave."'
+		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, you unruly fuck slave."'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
 	else
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumGate'
@@ -887,13 +890,13 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumGate':
 	if endPunishment = 1:
-		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, unruly slave slut."'
+		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, you unruly slave."'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
 	elseif buyout = 1:
-		'"Now <<$pcs_firstname>> you will be filled with my seed for the first time, so be sure to cherish the memory of this moment!"'
+		'"You will be filled with my seed for the first time, so be sure to cherish the memory of this moment!"'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumAss'		
 	else
-		'"So where do you want me to put the deposit, love?"'
+		'"So where do you want it, bitch?"'
 		
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cum'
 		
@@ -962,14 +965,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumPussy':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumpussy<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if vagDMG > 0:
 		'As he delivers his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside your vagina, you can feel the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock at your cervix and even a bit inside it.'
-		'His bursting cum penetrates through the cervix directly into your womb, which causes you both pain and a weird warm sensation.'
+		'His bursting cum penetrates through the cervix directly into your womb, which causes a warm, yet painful sensation to flow through you.'
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
 	*nl
 	if cumVol = 3:
 		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried inside your pussy, the customer delivers his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm inside you.'
-		'When he takes it out, some of the sperm drips out of your cunt.'
+		'When he pulls it out, some of the sperm drips out of your cunt.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
 		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried deep inside your pussy, his tip touches your cervix.'
 		'He pumps your vagina full of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm.'
@@ -1001,9 +1004,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumass<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if assDMG > 0:
-		'As he cums inside your anus, you can feel the banging of his <<$dick_girth>> cock against your intestinal wall.'
-		'A moving bulge is visible on your otherwise flat stomach as his phallus moves inside you.'
-		'His bursting cum fills you, and it seems as if it went backwards up to your very stomach.'
+		'As he cums inside your ass, you can feel his <<$dick_girth>> cock slamming against your intestinal wall.'
+		'A moving bulge is visible on your otherwise flat stomach as his dick moves inside you.'
+		'His cum fills you, and it feels as if it has flowed right up to your stomach.'
 		pain['asshole'] += assDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -1015,34 +1018,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 		else
 			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
 		end
-		'After his dick is removed, part of the sperm drips out of your gaping hole.'
+		'After his dick is removed, some of the sperm drips out of your gaping hole.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
-		'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines sometimes even hitting your intestinal walls.'
+		'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines, sometimes even hitting your intestinal walls.'
 		if buyout = 1:
 			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside, you can feel your stomach grow larger...'
 		else
 			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside, the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably...'
 		end
 		'You feel very full, even after he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> dick out of you.'
-		'After a few seconds, a large portion of his <<$cumType>> amount of cum spurts out of you as if from a garden hose.'
+		'After a few seconds, a large portion of his <<$cumType>> amount of cum spurts out of you, as if from a garden hose.'
 	elseif cumVol >= 5:
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>>''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
+			'<<$bName>>''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines, with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
 		else
-			'The customer''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
+			'The customer''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines, with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
 		end
 		'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines with a <<$cumType>> amount of cum.'
 		*nl
 		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably.'
 		'He looks at the bulge with joy then punches at it with his fist.'
-		'The cum burst out of your anus as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
+		'The cum bursts out of your anus as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
 		pain['tummy'] += 20
 		gs 'stat'
 	else
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>> cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small part of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm leaks out of your gaping anus.'
+			'<<$bName>> cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small amount of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm leaks out of your gaping anus.'
 		else
-			'The customer cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small part of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm leaks out of your gaping anus.'
+			'The customer cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small amountt of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm leaks out of your gaping anus.'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -1079,7 +1082,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumMouth':
 		'His <<$cumType>> amount of cum fills your gullet.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
 		'His <<$cumType>> amount of cum fills your gullet and drips down into your stomach.'
-		'You feel as if you just ate a bunch of biscuits.'
+		'You feel very full and bloated.'
 		pcs_energy += 50
 		pcs_hydra += 40
 	elseif cumVol => 5:
@@ -1106,9 +1109,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumFace':
 	if cumVol = 3:
 		'A <<$cumType>> amount of sperm lands all over your face.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
-		'A <<$cumType>> amount of sperm lands all over your face, some even in your eyes and hair.'
+		'A <<$cumType>> amount of sperm lands all over your face, some even lands in your eyes and hair.'
 	elseif cumVol => 5:
-		'A <<$cumType>> amount of sperm lands all over your face, in your eyes, hair, everywhere.'
+		'A <<$cumType>> amount of sperm lands all over your face. In your eyes, hair, everywhere.'
 		'There is so much cum that you have a solid layer on your face, as if you were wearing a cosmetic mask.'
 	else
 		'A <<$cumType>> cum volume is spread around your mouth and cheeks.'