[edits] Gad church text edits by Lydia

locations/gad_church.qsrc

@@ -45,7 +45,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Sermon':
 	church_moral += 1
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/church'+ rand(1,5) +'.jpg"></center>'
-	'The candles dim as the sermon begins. You listen intently to the priest as he preaches the word of god. You study his teachings, feeling enlightened, until you reach the end of the sermon.'
+	'The candles are dimmed as the sermon begins. You listen intently to the priest as he preaches the word of God. You study His teachings, feeling enlightened until you reach the end of the sermon.'
 	act 'Stand up':gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'
 end
 
@@ -66,7 +66,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vigil':
 	church_moral += 1
 	PLAY 'sound/church/Blessing.mp3',30
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/church'+ rand(1,5) +'.jpg"></center>'
-	'You attend the vigil and reflect on the recent events in your life. The harmonies as the hymns and psalms are sung sweep aside some of the worries in your heart, although you know they will return once you leave this holy place, you still enjoy the rest. The sweet scent of incense tickles your nose.'
+	'You attend the vigil and reflect on the recent events in your life. The harmonies as the hymns and psalms are sung sweep aside some of the worries in your heart; although you know they will return once you leave this holy place, you still enjoy the rest. The sweet scent of incense tickles your nose.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Return to Narthex': gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'
 	act 'Stay for the Rite of Mutual Forgiveness':
@@ -94,7 +94,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'liturgy':
 	gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 	PLAY 'sound/church/t' + rand(1,19) + '.mp3',30
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/church'+ rand(1,8) +'.jpg"></center>'
-	'You join the congregation for the Divine Liturgy. You see mostly older people around, but there are some people around your age present as well. You participate in the singing, but that''s about it. Your presence seems to go largely unnoticed and you have the chance to rest. You feel a lot better.'
+	'You join the congregation for the Divine Liturgy. You see mostly older people around, but some people around your age are also present. You participate in the singing, but that''s about it. Your presence seems to go largely unnoticed, and you have the chance to rest. You feel a lot better.'
     vokal_exp += rand(0,3)
     gs 'stat'
 	act 'Leave the church': gt 'gad_church' , 'start'
@@ -128,7 +128,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Narthex':
 	PLAY 'sound/church/76139__dkustic__090227-01-people-church-concert.wav',30
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/enterchurch.jpg"></center>'
 	'You enter the church and the scent of incense and beeswax fills your lungs. Your eyes are drawn past the Narthex into the Nave with its walls covered in lovingly painted icons while a thousand points of light dance in joy throughout God''s house from the magnificent chandelier that hangs from the ceiling.'
-	'To your left is a counter with many candles, icons and prayer books, a small jar rest next to it with a few rubels in it, donations for taking a candle.'
+	'To your left is a counter with many candles, icons and prayer books, a small jar resting next to it with a few rubels and donations for taking a candle.'
 	act 'Leave the church': gt 'gad_church' , 'start'
 	!!if ((week <= 5 and hour >= 7 and hour < 9) or (hour >= 16 and hour < 18)) and confessday ! daystart: act 'Go to confession': confessday = daystart & gt 'gad_church2', 'confession'
 	act 'Light a candle':gt 'gad_church', 'candle'
@@ -146,7 +146,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'candle':
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'gad_church', 'reducevillagerep', 25, -1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/ch_candle.jpg"></center>'
-	'You approach the counter and take one of the candles, lighting it, with out giving a donation.'
+	'You approach the counter and take one of the candles, lighting it without giving a donation.'
 	act 'Return to Narthex': gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'
 end
 
@@ -160,7 +160,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'candle1':
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'gad_church', 'reducevillagerep', 25, -1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/church/ch_candle.jpg"></center>'
-	'You approach the counter and put 10 <b>₽</b> in the jar for a candle. You take one of the candles and light it.'
+	'You approach the counter and put 10 <b>₽</b> in the jar for a candle. Then, you take one of the candles and light it.'
 	act 'Return to Narthex': gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'
 end
 
@@ -189,33 +189,33 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pray':
 			pcs_mood += 30
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += 15
-			'You decide to pray for a while. While you don''t consider yourself to be deeply religious, you do feel a strong connection to God when you look at the icons around you. You allow yourself to look deeply into your soul as you contemplate the direction your life is going.'
+			'You decide to pray for a while. While you don''t consider yourself deeply religious, you feel a solid connection to God when you look at the icons around you. You allow yourself to look deeply into your soul as you contemplate your life''s direction.'
 		elseif hour >6 and hour < 20 and church_moral >= 60:
 			pcs_horny -= 30
 			pcs_mood += 40
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += rand(30,60)
-			'You decide to pray. The beauty and glory of being in the body of God overwhelms you and you lose yourself in prayer. You''re unsure how much time has passed when you finally become aware of your surroundings again, but it doesn''t matter as you are at peace with God and the world.'
+			'You decide to pray. The beauty and glory of being in the body of God overwhelm you, and you lose yourself in prayer. When you finally become aware of your surroundings again, you''re unsure how much time has passed, but it doesn''t matter as you are at peace with God and the world.'
 		elseif (hour >= 20 or hour <= 6) and church_moral < 30:
 			pcs_horny -= 40
 			pcs_mood += 50
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += rand(30,60)
-			'The Nave is lit only with small candles, leaving your surroundings in darkness. You start to get a strange vibe, one you can''t quite shake. You suddenly get the urge to pray very intensely and before you know it, an hour has passed and you feel reborn.'
+			'The Nave is lit only with small candles, leaving your surroundings in darkness. You start to get a strange vibe you can''t quite shake. You suddenly get the urge to pray very intensely, and before you know it, an hour has passed, and you feel reborn.'
 		elseif (hour >= 20 or hour <= 6) and church_moral >= 30 and church_moral < 60:
 			pcs_horny = 0
 			pcs_mood += 50
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += rand(30,60)
 			if nark > 1: nark = nark/2
-			'The Nave is lit only with small candles, leaving your surroundings in darkness, but you find it comforting. You get the urge to pray very intensely and before you know it, an hour has passed and you feel cleansed.'
+			'The Nave is lit only with small candles, leaving your surroundings in darkness, but you find it comforting. You get the urge to pray very intensely, and before you know it, an hour has passed, and you feel cleansed.'
 		else
 			pcs_horny = 0
 			pcs_mood = 100
 			church_moral += 1
 			minut += 60
 			if nark > 1: nark = ((nark/4)*3)
-			'The Nave is lit only with candles and small presence lights and the darkness feels very comforting, like being in the womb. You get the urge to pray very intensely and before you know it, more than an hour has passed and you feel reborn and cleansed.'
+			'The Nave is lit only with candles and small presence lights, and the darkness feels very comforting, like being in the womb. You get the urge to pray very intensely, and before you know it, more than an hour has passed, and you feel reborn and cleansed.'
 		end
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Return to Narthex': gt 'gad_church', 'Narthex'