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Merge branch 'master' of https://git.tfgames.site/Kevin_Smarts/glife

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  1. 4 5
      locations/metro.qsrc
  2. 116 120
      locations/metro_events.qsrc

+ 4 - 5
locations/metro.qsrc

@@ -130,16 +130,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vagon':
 
 	if metro_busy = 0:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/metroempty.jpg"></center>'
-		'The car is almost completely empty. One or two other passengers are in the car with you. It seems a bit odd and a little creepy seeing the car this empty. You have practically the whole car to yourself and pick the cleanest spot to sit.'
+		'The car is almost completely empty, with only one or two other passengers in the car with you. It seems a bit odd and a little creepy seeing the car this empty. Having practically the entire car to yourself, you pick the cleanest spot to sit.'
 	elseif metro_busy = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/metro.jpg"></center>'
 		'The car is mostly empty, leaving you a choice of seats. You easily find a place for yourself, leaving you plenty of room to get comfortable. The few other people on the car mind their own business, leaving you to your own thoughts.'
 	elseif metro_busy = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/metrofull<<rand(1,5)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'The car is full of people. All of the seats are taken, but only a few people are forced to stand. At least it is not packed. You easily find a place for yourself, leaving you plenty of room to get comfortable.'
+		'The car is full of people. All of the seats are taken, but only a few people are forced to stand. At least it''s not packed. You easily find a place for yourself, leaving you plenty of room to get comfortable.'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/metropacked.jpg"></center>'
-		'The car is packed with people. Most of them are forced to stand, as there are not enough seats. It is so tightly packed that people are crammed tight up against each other either in the seats or standing up. You manage to squeeze yourself in among the people. You can feel other bodies pressed up tightly against yours. It is very uncomfortable and hot.'
+		'The car is packed with people, most of them being forced to stand as there are not enough seats. It''s so tightly packed that people are crammed up tightly against each other either, but you manage to squeeze yourself in. You can feel other bodies pressed up tightly against yours, making for a very uncomfortable journey.'
 	end
 
 	if (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) or cumloc[11] = 1:
@@ -165,7 +165,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shop':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<b>What''s it gonna be?</b>'
 	'He shows you a small box filled with red and blue pills. There are about two dozen of each pill inside.'
 	act 'Leave':gt 'metro','start'
 	if money >= 1000:
@@ -208,7 +207,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'dealer':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
-	'He sizes you up with suspicion.<br><b>"Hey miss, saw you buying Lady in the park."</b> <br>He clears his throat and spits onto the tracks.<b> "That shit will mess you up."</b><br>He opens his coat, and you flinch thinking he is going to flash you, but instead you see he is wearing a business suit beneath.<br>He gestures at numerous pockets lining the insides of his coat. They are filled to bursting with various packages, pills and ampules.<br><b>"Here, my products are of a much better quality. You''ll have a great time, and I guarantee they won''t kill you."</b>'
+	'He sizes you up with suspicion. "Hey there. Saw you buying Lady in the park." He clears his throat and spits onto the tracks. "That shit will mess you up." He opens his coat, and you flinch, thinking he''s going to flash you, but instead see that he''s wearing a business suit underneath. He gestures at numerous pockets lining the insides of his coat. They are filled to bursting with various packages, pills and ampules. "Here, my products are of a much better quality. You''ll have a great time, and I guarantee they won''t kill you."'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'metro','shop'
 end
 

+ 116 - 120
locations/metro_events.qsrc

@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 	spot = 500*rand(16,24)
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frot.jpg"></center>'
-	'You feel something solid pressing against your ass. A few moments pases by, as you realize what the hardness you feel pressing against you is, it''s someone''s rock hard cock!'
+	'You feel something solid pressing against your ass. A few seconds pass by before you realize what the hardness you feel pressing against you is - it''s someone''s rock hard cock!'
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'medium'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 		act 'Move away (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -32,11 +32,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 		act 'Move away (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 	end
 	act 'Disregard':
-		cla
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frot1.jpg"></center>'
-		'The guy standing behind you, disregarding the other passengers, grabs your butt cheek with his hand, while rubbing his crotch against your ass.'
+		'The guy standing behind you, disregarding the other passengers, grabs your ass cheek with his hand while rubbing his crotch against your ass.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 		gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -54,7 +53,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frot2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You feel his rock hard cock more clearly now; and by the way it is moving, you are sure he has taken it out of his pants and is rubbing it against your ass. His hands continue to cling on to you, squeezing your buttocks.'
+			'You feel his rock hard cock more clearly now; and by the way it is moving, you''re sure he''s taken it out of his pants and is rubbing it against your ass. His hands continue to cling on to you, squeezing your buttocks.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 			gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'medium'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -76,7 +75,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 				clr
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotc'+ rand(1,2) +'.jpg"></center>'
-				'The man jerks back, and stops molesting you. A few moments later, you can feel something wet seep through your clothes. After a few more seconds, the guy moves away.'
+				'The man jerks back, and stops molesting you. A few seconds later, you feel something wet seep through your clothes. After a few more seconds, the guy moves away.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finished':gt 'metro_events', 'fin2'
@@ -91,7 +90,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 	spot = 500*rand(16,24)
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotd2.jpg"></center>'
-	'There is a man standing behind you. He begins playing with your skirt.'
+	'There is a man standing behind you who begins playing with your skirt.'
 	gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 		act 'Move away (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -107,7 +106,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frota1.jpg"></center>'
-		'The man cautiously lifts your skirt and begins caressing your buttocks with his strong hands.'
+		'The man cautiously lifts your skirt and begins caressing your buttocks with his hands.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 		gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -125,7 +124,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frota2.jpg"></center>'
-			'The man pulls your panties down to your knees, then lets your skirt fall back into place. He slides his hand between your thighs, caressing your clit. After a couple of minutes of pleasuring you, he pulls your hand back, placing it on his cock.'
+			'The man pulls your panties down to your knees, then lets your skirt fall back into place. He slides his hand between your thighs, caressing your clit. After spending a few minutes pleasuring you, he pulls your hand back, placing it on his cock.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 			gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -151,7 +150,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 					gs 'cum_call', 'butt', 'stranger on the metro', 0, 0, spot, svol
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotd1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You angrily pull your hand away, which he allows you to do. A few moments later, you can feel the head of his cock, and hand, bumping against your ass check, as he jerks off. Minutes later you feel spurts of hot cum splashing against your ass cheeks. Once he is finished, he pulls your panties back up over your sperm covered ass, patting you on the butt, before moving away, and disappearing in the crowd.'
+					'You angrily pull your hand away, which he allows you to do. A few seconds later, you feel the head of his cock, and hand, bumping against your ass cheek as he jerks off. Minutes later, you feel spurts of hot cum splashing against your ass cheeks. Once he''s finished, he pulls your panties back up over your sperm covered ass and pats you on the ass before disappearing into the crowd.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Finished':gt 'metro_events', 'fin2'
@@ -165,7 +164,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 				frot += 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotd.jpg"></center>'
-				'With your hand on his cock, you grip it firmly, and start stroking. As he seems to really enjoy it, he reaches up then places his hands on your shoulders, trying to push you down to your knees.'
+				'With your hand on his cock, you grip it firmly and start stroking. As he seems to really enjoy it, he reaches up and places his hands on your shoulders, trying to push you down to your knees.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'hj', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 				gs 'willpower', 'hj', 'resist', 'medium'
 				if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -178,7 +177,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 						gs 'cum_call', 'butt', 'stranger on the metro', 0, 0, spot, svol
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotd1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You angrily pull your hand away, which he allows you to do. A few moments later, you can feel the head of his cock, and hand, bumping against your ass check, as he jerks off. Minutes later you feel spurts of hot cum splashing against your ass cheeks. Once he is finished, he pulls your panties back up over your sperm covered ass, patting you on the butt, before moving away, and disappearing in the crowd.'
+						'You angrily pull your hand away, which he allows you to do. A few seconds later, you feel the head of his cock, and hand, bumping against your ass cheek as he jerks off. Minutes later, you feel spurts of hot cum splashing against your ass cheeks. Once he''s finished, he pulls your panties back up over your sperm covered ass and pats you on the ass before disappearing into the crowd.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Finished':gt 'metro_events', 'fin2'
@@ -190,7 +189,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frote1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You give into his demands, and squat down in front of him, he grabs your head then turns your face to his crotch. His rock hard cock is waiting for you. He starts rubbing his cock against your face, and lips, teasing his cock.'
+					'You give into his demands and squat down in front of him. He grabs your head and turns your face to his crotch, his rock hard cock waiting for you. He starts rubbing his cock against your face and lips, teasing his cock.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 					gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist', 'medium'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -210,12 +209,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 						frot += 1
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frote2.jpg"></center>'
-						'You obediently open your mouth and begin sucking his hard cock. You are sitting on your haunches; in the middle of a crowded subway car, sucking a strangers cock.'
+						'You obediently open your mouth and begin sucking his hard cock. You''re sitting on your haunches, in the middle of a crowded subway car, sucking a stranger''s cock.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 3, 'sub', 'unknown'
 						act 'Continue to suck':
 							*clr & cla
 							gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'stranger on the metro', 0, 0, spot, svol
-							
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frote3.jpg"></center>'
 							'The man pulls his cock out of your mouth, and hot cum splatters across your cheek and chin. Once he has milked the last drop of sperm from his cock onto your face, he tucks his cock into his pants and moves away. He forces his way through the crowd before disappearing, leaving you alone with his cum all over your face.'
@@ -236,7 +234,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 	spot = 500*rand(16,24)
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotp.jpg"></center>'
-	'An unknown man nears you from behind and without any hesitation shoves his hand down the back of your pants.'
+	'An unknown man nears you from behind, and without any hesitation, shoves his hand down the back of your pants.'
 	gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 		act 'Move away (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -252,7 +250,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotp.jpg"></center>'
-		'You enjoy the nice sensation while the stranger caresses your ass. With his other hand, he reaches around and begins fondling your left breast under the shirt.'
+		'You enjoy the nice sensation as the stranger caresses your ass. With his other hand, he reaches around and begins fondling your left breast under your shirt.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 		gs 'stat'
 		gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
@@ -271,7 +269,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotp2.jpg"></center>'
-			'After a few moments of the playing with your pucker, he pulls his hand out and instead grabs your second breast. He''s now fondling both of your breast while his cock is pushing against your behind.'
+			'After a few minutes, he pulls his hand out and grabs your other breast. He''s now fondling both of your breasts as his cock pushes against your ass.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 			gs 'stat'
 			gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
@@ -290,7 +288,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotd.jpg"></center>'
-				'Once he hears you moan, he pulls his hands away from your breasts, he slides them down the front of your body; to the waist of your pants. He unbuttons your pants then pulls them down; along with your panties, down to your knees, leaving you; exposed from the waist down, in a crowded subway car. He takes your hand and places it on his rock hard cock.'
+				'Once he hears you moan, he pulls his hands away from your breasts and slides them down the front of your body to the waist of your pants. He unbuttons your pants and pulls them, along with your panties, down to your knees, leaving you exposed from the waist down in a crowded subway car. He takes your hand and places it on his rock hard cock.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown', 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist', 'medium'
@@ -315,7 +313,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotd1.jpg"></center>'
-						'He stands firm, and once again tries to push you down, but you won''t budge. As he can''t convince you, he relaxes instead, letting you go on as you keep jerking him off. When he moans into your ear, you start stroking it more vigorously, a couple of minutes later, you feel spurts of hot cum splashing against your ass cheek. Once he is finished he pulls your panties back up over your sperm covered ass then pats you on the butt, before moving away, and disappearing in the crowd.'
+						'He stands firm, and once again tries to push you down, but you won''t budge. As he can''t convince you, he relaxes instead, letting you go on as you keep jerking him off. When he moans into your ear, you start stroking it more vigorously and a few minutes later, you feel spurts of hot cum splashing against your ass cheek. Once he''s finished, he pulls your panties back up over your sperm covered ass and pats you on the ass before disappearing into the crowd.'
 						act 'Finished':gt 'metro_events', 'fin2'
 					end
 				else
@@ -327,7 +325,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 					frot += 1
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotd.jpg"></center>'
-					'With your hand on his cock, you grip it firmly, and start stroking. As he seems to really enjoy it, he reaches up then places his hands on your shoulders, trying to push you down to your knees.'
+					'With your hand on his cock, you grip it firmly and start stroking. As he seems to really enjoy it, he reaches up and places his hands on your shoulders, trying to push you down to your knees.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'hj', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 					gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist', 'medium'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -337,7 +335,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frotd1.jpg"></center>'
-							'He stands firm, and once again tries to push you down, but you won''t budge. As he can''t convince you, he relaxes instead, letting you go on as you keep jerking him off. When he moans into your ear, you start stroking it more vigorously, a couple of minutes later, you feel spurts of hot cum splashing against your ass cheek. Once he is finished he pulls your panties back up over your sperm covered ass then pats you on the butt, before moving away, and disappearing in the crowd.'
+							'He stands firm, and once again tries to push you down, but you won''t budge. As he can''t convince you, he relaxes instead, letting you go on as you keep jerking him off. When he moans into your ear, you start stroking it more vigorously and a few minutes later, you feel spurts of hot cum splashing against your ass cheek. Once he''s finished, he pulls your panties back up over your sperm covered ass and pats you on the ass before disappearing into the crowd.'
 							act 'Finished':gt 'metro_events', 'fin2'
 						end
 					else
@@ -347,7 +345,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 						*clr & cla
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frote1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You give into his demands, and squat down in front of him, he grabs your head then turns your face to his crotch. His rock hard cock is waiting for you. He starts rubbing his cock against your face, and lips, teasing his cock.'
+						'You give into his demands and squat down in front of him. He grabs your head and turns your face to his crotch, his rock hard cock waiting for you. He starts rubbing his cock against your face and lips, teasing his cock.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'unknown'
 						gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist', 'medium'
 						if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -371,7 +369,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'c':
 							act 'Continue to suck':
 								*clr & cla
 								gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'stranger on the metro', 0, 0, spot, svol
-								
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/grop/frote3.jpg"></center>'
 								'The man pulls his cock out of your mouth, and hot cum splatters across your cheek and chin. Once he has milked the last drop of sperm from his cock onto your face, he tucks his cock into his pants and moves away. He forces his way through the crowd before disappearing, leaving you alone with his cum all over your face.'
@@ -389,13 +386,13 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'fin':
 	*clr & cla
-	'You barely manage to pull away from the horny idiot. You force your way through the crowded car, and find a new place to stand, as far away from him, as you can get. After a while, you get to your station.'
+	'You barely manage to pull away from the horny idiot and force your way through the crowded car to find a new place to stand as far away from him as you can get. After a while, you get to your station.'
 	act 'Get out of the car':gt 'metro', 'start'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'fin2':
 	*clr & cla
-	'Now that he is gone, and you are covered in his cum, you notice the other passengers staring at you. You should likely clean up before your step outside.'
+	'Now that he''s gone, and you are covered in his cum, you notice the other passengers staring at you. You should clean up before you step outside.'
 	act 'Get out of the car':gt 'metro', 'start'
 end
 
@@ -405,21 +402,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 	metrorand = rand(1,22)
 	if metrorand = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/aflash1.jpg"></center>'
-		'After your ride on the metro, you leave the station, following several people up the stairs, towards the street. The backside of a women''s skirt keeps lifting up; from the draft of air. Each time it lifts up, it shows off her firm tightly ass, which draws the attention of several men and even a few of the women.'
+		'After your ride on the metro, you leave the station, following several people up the stairs towards the street. The backside of a women''s skirt keeps lifting up from the draft of air. Each time it lifts up, it shows off her firm tight ass, which draws the attention of several men and even a few of the women.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	elseif metrorand = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/guitar'+ rand(1,7) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a man playing a guitar, he has his guitar case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to him play, he isn''t half bad.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a man playing a guitar; he has his guitar case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to him play; he isn''t half bad.'
 		act 'Ignore':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		act 'Listen':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 10
 			pcs_mood += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/guitar'+ rand(1,7) +'.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop and listen to him play several songs, he really is pretty good. You wonder why he is playing in a metro station, perhaps the old adage about starving artist applies to musicians as well.'
+			'You stop and listen to him play several songs.'
 			act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			if money > 50:
 				act 'Give him money':
@@ -427,7 +424,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 					money -= 50
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/givemoney.jpg"></center>'
-					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money, you drop it into his case. He looks up at you and smiles and nods his head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done you leave the station and go on your way.'
+					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money to drop into his case. He looks up at you and smiles and nods his head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done, you leave the station and go on your way.'
 
 					act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
@@ -435,14 +432,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/violin'+ rand(1,3) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a young woman, she has her violin case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to her play, she isn''t half bad.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a young woman has her violin case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to her play; she isn''t half bad.'
 		act 'Ignore': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		act 'Listen':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 10
 			pcs_mood += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/violin'+ rand(1,3) +'.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop and listen to her play several songs, she really is pretty good. You wonder why she is playing in a metro station, perhaps the old adage about starving artist applies to musicians as well.'
+			'You stop and listen to her play several songs.'
 			act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			if money > 50:
 				act 'Give her money':
@@ -450,14 +447,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 					money -= 50
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/givemoney.jpg"></center>'
-					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money, you drop it into her case. She looks up at you and smiles and nods her head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done you leave the station and go on your way.'
+					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money to drop into her case. She looks up at you and smiles and nods her head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done, you leave the station and go on your way.'
 					act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	elseif metrorand <= 6:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/flashd1.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'As you leave the metro car, you, and nearly everyone else, notice two African men walking. One of them has a huge bulge in the front of his pants. When he catches you eyeing them, he stops, pulling his pants down. As he does that a massive black cock springs free, which causes a lot more people to look in shock.'
+		'As you leave the metro car, you, and nearly everyone else, notice two African men, one of whom has a huge bulge in his pants. When he catches you eyeing them, he stops and pulls his pants down. A massive black cock springs free, which causes a lot more people to look in shock.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Hurry away':
@@ -472,19 +469,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 				if $pantyworntype = 'none':
 					if PCloPants > 0:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/flashing/pants/inside/pussy/hairy1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You smile back at them and pull down your pants flashing your pussy to them. They wave you over.'
+						'You smile back at them and pull down your pants, flashing your pussy at them. They wave you over.'
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/flashing/dress/inside/pussy/hairy4.jpg"></center>'
-						'You smile back at them and pull up your '+iif(PCloSkirt > 0, 'skirt', 'dress')+' flashing your pussy to them. They wave you over.'
+						'You smile back at them and pull up your '+iif(PCloSkirt > 0, 'skirt', 'dress')+', flashing your pussy at them. They wave you over.'
 					end
 					gs 'flash', 'pussy', 'outdoors', 3, 1
 				else
 					if PCloPants > 0:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/flashing/pants/inside/panty/1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You smile back at them and pull down your pants flashing your panties to them. They wave you over.'
+						'You smile back at them and pull down your pants, flashing your panties at them. They wave you over.'
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/flashing/dress/inside/panty/4.jpg"></center>'
-						'You smile back at them and pull up your '+iif(PCloSkirt > 0, 'skirt', 'dress')+' flashing your panties to them. They wave you over.'
+						'You smile back at them and pull up your '+iif(PCloSkirt > 0, 'skirt', 'dress')+', flashing your panties at them. They wave you over.'
 					end
 					gs 'flash', 'panties', 'outdoors', 1, 1
 				end
@@ -499,7 +496,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		act 'Stare in shock':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/shock.jpg"></center>'
-			'It is just so big, you can''t help but stare at it, you briefly wonder if his friend is as big as he is. Then you notice them smiling and staring at you, as he puts his dick back away they wave you over.'
+			'It''s so big that you can''t help but stare at it while wondering if his friend is as big as he is. You notice them smiling and staring at you as he puts his dick back away they wave you over.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Hurry away':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -508,7 +505,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		act 'Lick your lips':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/shock.jpg"></center>'
-			'You can''t help yourself, seeing that big dick, you lick your lip. They see that and both grin wide and wave you over as the one puts his dick away.'
+			'You lick your lips at the sight. They see that and both grin and wave you over he puts his dick away.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Hurry away':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -516,7 +513,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 7:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/flashus'+ rand(1,5) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a pretty young woman, she keeps lifting her skirt; flashing her pussy at various strangers. As you get closer she smiles at you and then flashes you.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a pretty young woman who keeps lifting her skirt and flashing her pussy at various strangers. As you get closer, she smiles at and then flashes you.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -532,19 +529,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 				if $pantyworntype = 'none':
 					if PCloPants > 0:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/flashing/pants/inside/pussy/hairy1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You smile back at her and pull down your pants flashing your pussy back to her. You both share a laugh before going on your way.'
+						'You smile back at her and pull down your pants, flashing your pussy at her. You both share a laugh before going on your way.'
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/flashing/dress/inside/pussy/hairy4.jpg"></center>'
-						'You smile back at her and pull up your '+iif(PCloSkirt > 0, 'skirt', 'dress')+' flashing your pussy back to her. You both share a laugh before going on your way.'
+						'You smile back at her and pull up your '+iif(PCloSkirt > 0, 'skirt', 'dress')+', flashing your pussy back at her. You both share a laugh before going on your way.'
 					end
 					gs 'flash', 'pussy', 'outdoors', 3, 1
 				else
 					if PCloPants > 0:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/flashing/pants/inside/panty/1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You smile back at her and pull down your pants flashing your panties to her. You both share a laugh before going on your way.'
+						'You smile back at her and pull down your pants, flashing your panties at her. You both share a laugh before going on your way.'
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/flashing/dress/inside/panty/4.jpg"></center>'
-						'You smile back at her and pull up your '+iif(PCloSkirt > 0, 'skirt', 'dress')+' flashing your panties to her. You both share a laugh before going on your way.'
+						'You smile back at her and pull up your '+iif(PCloSkirt > 0, 'skirt', 'dress')+', flashing your panties at her. You both share a laugh before going on your way.'
 					end
 					gs 'flash', 'panties', 'outdoors', 1, 1
 				end
@@ -557,61 +554,61 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 8:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/nakedg1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you see a naked woman, only wearing a pair of boots boarding another metro train. She is actually walking around casually, like there is nothing; even remotely, out of the ordinary. She is garnering a lot of attention from everyone around her, but she seems completely oblivious to it. Within moments, she boards the other train, and is gone.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you see a naked woman wearing only a pair of boots boarding another train. She''s casually walking around as if there''s nothing even remotely out of the ordinary. She''s garnering a lot of attention from everyone around her, but she seems completely oblivious to it. Within seconds, she boards the train and is gone.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	elseif metrorand = 9:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/nakedg2.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you see a naked woman, she is huddled down on her knees; against one of the pillars. She is using her arms to cover up her body, as best she can; clearly ashamed.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you see a naked woman huddled down on her knees against one of the pillars. She''s using her arms to cover up her body as best she can, clearly ashamed.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
-		act 'Ignore Her':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
+		act 'Ignore her':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		if money >= 50:
-			act 'Help Her and pay for taxi':
+			act 'Help her':
 				*clr & cla
 				money -= 50
 				pcs_mood += 10
 				minut += 10
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/nakedg2.jpg"></center>'
-				'You notice a newspaper on one of the benches, you walk over and grab it then come back to her offering it to her. Now that you are closer you can see she is crying, she nods though and takes the newspaper and covers up as best she can. You then lead her out of the metro and call her a taxi, as you wait for the taxi you find out she made her boyfriend mad who stripped her and left her naked. Telling her she would have nothing with out him and to see how she likes it. Once the taxi arrives she thanks you for paying for it the taxi.'
+				'You notice a newspaper on one of the benches and grab it before walking over and offering it to her. Now that you''re closer, you can see she''s crying, though she takes the newspaper and covers up as best as she can before you lead her out of the metro and call her a taxi. As you wait for the taxi, you find out she made her boyfriend mad and he stripped her and left her naked. Once the taxi arrives, she thanks you and climbs in.'
 				act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			end
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 10:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/nakedm1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you see a naked man, the only thing he is wearing is a huge grin. He seems rather proud at the attention he is getting, though you have no idea why. After a quick check you notice he packs nothing special in the manhood department. He continues on his way, just as you do.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you see a naked man with a huge grin on his face. He seems rather proud at the attention he''s getting, though you have no idea why. After a quick check, you notice he packs nothing special in the manhood department as he continues on his way, as do you.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	elseif metrorand = 11:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/nakedp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you see two couples looking a bit strange... All four of them are naked, only wearing shoes, carrying bags with them. They act normal, as if walking through the metro completely naked is a perfectly normal thing to do. They garner a lot of attention from the other people in the station, but they just head towards one of the metro trains.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you see two couples looking a bit strange... All four of them are naked, wearing only shoes while carrying bags with them. They act normal, as if walking through the metro completely naked is a perfectly normal thing to do. They garner a lot of attention from the other people in the station, but they just keep heading towards one of the trains.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	elseif metrorand = 12:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/seethru1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you leave the metro station, you find yourself walking up the stairs behind a woman wearing a sheer dress. It is completely see through, it is obvious that she is not wearing any underwear at all. Which gives you a very nice view of her ass, once you reach the street, she heads off down the sidewalk.'
+		'As you leave the metro station, you find yourself walking up the stairs behind a woman wearing a sheer dress. It is completely see through, and you can see that she''s not wearing any underwear, which gives you a very nice view of her ass. Once you reach the street, she heads off down the sidewalk.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	elseif metrorand = 13:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/sex/jerkoff1.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'As you walk past one of the pillars, you see a man with his pants around his knees jerking off, just as you walk past, he starts cumming. He starts shooting his sperm out onto the floor, barely missing a woman that happens to go by at the wrong moment. Once he stops cumming, he pulls his pants up, and goes about his business.'
+		'As you walk past one of the pillars, you see a man with his pants around his knees jerking off. Just as you walk past, he starts cumming, barely missing a woman that happens to go by at the wrong moment. Once he stops cumming, he pulls his pants up and goes about his business.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	elseif metrorand = 14:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/sex/les1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you see a woman sitting on one of the benches in the station. Her skirt is pulled up, wearing no panties, with her legs stretched out, leaving plenty of room for the girl down on all fours in front of her to eat her pussy, who''s skirt is also pulled up, not wearing panties, giving everyone that are walking by a perfect vision of her pussy.'
-		'The one sitting fends off anyone trying to join in while her friend eats her out. Many people stop to watch the pair, several people pull out their smart phones, recording the show.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you see a woman sitting on one of the benches in the station. Her skirt is pulled up and she has her legs stretched out, leaving plenty of room for the girl down on all fours in front of her to eat her pussy, whose skirt is also pulled up, giving everyone walking by a perfect view of her bare pussy.'
+		'The one sitting fends off anyone trying to join in while her friend eats her out. Many people stop to watch the pair, several pulling out their phones to record the show.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave':
@@ -624,7 +621,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'exp_gain', 'photoskl', 2
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/sex/les1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You pull out your phone as well then start recording them. The one on all fours is going at it, and has her friend quickly moaning loudly, clutching at her hair. Moments later, she gasps loudly, and withers against her friends face, obviously having an orgasm. Once she recovers from her orgasm, they passionately kiss, then get up and straighten their clothes, before heading out.'
+			'You pull out your phone and start recording them. The one on all fours is going at it, and has her friend quickly moaning loudly while clutching at her hair. Seconds later, she gasps loudly and withers against her friend''s face as she had an orgasm. Once she recovers, they passionately kiss before standing up and straightening their clothes before heading out.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -633,7 +630,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 	elseif metrorand = 15:
 		metrorand['rand'] = rand(1,2)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/sex/fuck'+ metrorand['rand'] +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you see a couple leaning against one of the walls, you see the woman struggling to keep her moans as quiet as possible as she''s bent over at the waist while the man behind her is hammering her for all he is worth. Several people gather around the couple to watch them fuck, many of them pulling out their smart phones to record the couple fucking. A couple of men are trying to join in, but are quickly shooed away.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you see a couple leaning against one of the walls, the woman struggling to keep her moans quiet as the man hammers her for all he is worth. Several people gather around to watch, many of them pulling out their phones to record the scene. A few men try to join in, but are quickly shooed away.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Hurry away':
@@ -647,7 +644,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/sex/fuck'+ metrorand['rand'] +'.jpg"></center>'
 			killvar 'metrorand'
 			gs 'exp_gain', 'photoskl', 2
-			'You pull out your phone as well then start recording them. He pounds her without mercy, but by the sounds of her moans, she is loving every moment of it. They fuck for several more minutes until he starts to grunt, and then buries himself; balls deep in her for a moment, as he is obviously cumming. Once he pulls out of her, they both quickly get dressed then move to catch a train.'
+			'You pull out your phone and start recording them. He pounds her without mercy, but by the sounds of her moans, she is loving every moment of it. They fuck for several more minutes until he starts to grunt and buries himself balls deep. Once he pulls out of her, they both quickly get dressed and hurry to catch a train.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -655,14 +652,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 16:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/guitarf'+ rand(1,2) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a woman playing a guitar, she has her guitar case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to her play, she isn''t half bad.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a woman playing a guitar; she has her guitar case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to her play; she isn''t half bad.'
 		act 'Ignore':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		act 'Listen':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 10
 			pcs_mood += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/guitarf'+ rand(1,2) +'.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop and listen to her play several songs, she really is pretty good. You wonder why she is playing in a metro station, perhaps the old adage about starving artist applies to musicians as well.'
+			'You stop and listen to her play several songs, she really is pretty good.'
 			act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			if money > 50:
 				act 'Give her money':
@@ -670,7 +667,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 					money -= 50
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/givemoney.jpg"></center>'
-					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money, you drop it into her case. She looks up at you and smiles and nods her head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done you leave the station and go on your way.'
+					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money to drop into her case. She looks up at you and smiles and nods her head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done, you leave the station and go on your way.'
 
 					act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
@@ -678,14 +675,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 17:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/musicgroupm'+ rand(1,7) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a group of men playing music, there is a case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to them play, they isn''t half bad.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a group of men playing music; there is a case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to them play; they aren''t half bad.'
 		act 'Ignore': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		act 'Listen':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 10
 			pcs_mood += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/musicgroupm'+ rand(1,7) +'.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop and listen to them play several songs, they really is pretty good. You wonder why they are playing in a metro station, perhaps the old adage about starving artist applies to musicians as well.'
+			'You stop and listen to them play several songs.'
 			act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			if money > 50:
 				act 'Give them money':
@@ -693,21 +690,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 					money -= 50
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/givemoney.jpg"></center>'
-					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money, you drop it into the case. One of the men looks up at you and smiles and nods his head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done you leave the station and go on your way.'
+					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money to drop into the case. One of the men looks up at you and smiles and nods his head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done, you leave the station and go on your way.'
 					act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 18:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/accordionm'+ rand(1,2) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a man playing a accordion, he has his case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to him play, he isn''t half bad.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a man playing an accordion; he has his case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to him play; he isn''t half bad.'
 		act 'Ignore':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		act 'Listen':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 10
 			pcs_mood += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/accordionm'+ rand(1,2) +'.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop and listen to him play several songs, he really is pretty good. You wonder why he is playing in a metro station, perhaps the old adage about starving artist applies to musicians as well.'
+			'You stop and listen to him play several songs.'
 			act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			if money > 50:
 				act 'Give him money':
@@ -715,7 +712,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 					money -= 50
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/givemoney.jpg"></center>'
-					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money, you drop it into his case. He looks up at you and smiles and nods his head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done you leave the station and go on your way.'
+					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money to drop into his case. He looks up at you and smiles and nods his head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done, you leave the station and go on your way.'
 
 					act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
@@ -723,14 +720,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 19:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/musicgroup1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a group of men and women playing music, there is a case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to them play, they isn''t half bad.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a group of men and women playing music; there is a case open and you can see some money in it already. Several other people have stopped to listen to them play; they aren''t half bad.'
 		act 'Ignore': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		act 'Listen':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 10
 			pcs_mood += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/musicgroup1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop and listen to them play several songs, they really is pretty good. You wonder why they are playing in a metro station, perhaps the old adage about starving artist applies to musicians as well.'
+			'You stop and listen to them play several songs.'
 			act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			if money > 50:
 				act 'Give her money':
@@ -738,14 +735,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 					money -= 50
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/givemoney.jpg"></center>'
-					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money, you drop it into the case. One of the men looks up at you and smiles and nods his head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done you leave the station and go on your way.'
+					'You reach into your purse and pull out some money to drop into the case. One of the men looks up at you and smiles and nods his head, but keeps playing. With your good deed done, you leave the station and go on your way.'
 					act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 20:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/sex/fuck3.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a couple having sex very obviously across the tracks. You can''t believe your eyes and despite this being a completely public place, you can''t pull your eyes away. They are either a very sexually adventurous couple or a very stupid one, as this terminal is often patrolled by police officers. Regardless, they don''t seem to be stopping anytime soon, and when the male half notices you watching, he flashes you a hand gesture, never missing a thrust.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you notice a couple having sex on the other side of the tracks. You can''t believe your eyes and despite this being a completely public place, you can''t pull your eyes away. They''re either a very adventurous couple or a very stupid one, as this terminal is often patrolled by police officers. Regardless, they don''t seem to be stopping anytime soon, and when the man notices you watching, he flashes you a hand gesture while never missing a thrust.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Hurry away':
@@ -758,7 +755,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'exp_gain', 'photoskl', 2
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/sex/fuck3.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'You pull out your phone as well then start recording them. He pounds her without mercy, but by the sounds of her moans, she is loving every moment of it. They fuck for several more minutes until he starts to grunt, and then buries himself; balls deep in her for a moment, as he is obviously cumming. Once he pulls out of her, they both quickly get dressed then move to catch a train.'
+			'You pull out your phone and start recording them. He pounds her without mercy, but by the sounds of her moans, she is loving every moment of it. They fuck for several more minutes until he starts to grunt and buries himself balls deep. Once he pulls out of her, they both quickly get dressed and rush to catch a train.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -766,14 +763,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'station':
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 21:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/caught_skirt.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you step off the metro and begin to head up the stairs toward the street above, you notice a girl trying to adjust her skirt which has gotten caught up around her waistband. But while doing so, she has accidentally exposed her bare butt to everyone behind her! Just a few moments after you notice what''s going on, a few gopniks do as well, and start to cat-call and yell at at the girl. She quickly covers up, rushing out of the terminal with bright red cheeks, clearly embarrassed.'
+		'As you step off the train and head up the stairs toward the street, you notice a girl trying to adjust her skirt, which has gotten caught up around her waistband. While doing so, she has accidentally exposed her bare ass to everyone behind her. A few seconds later, a few gopniks notice her and start catcalling at the girl, who quickly covers up and rushes away with bright red cheeks.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg	
 	elseif metrorand = 22:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/station/caught_skirt.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you head through the metro station, there''s two women standing on the platform waiting for the metro dressed in latex body suits. Their heels are extremely high and you imagine how much muscle control it must take just to stand in them, let alone walk through the city''s streets and sidewalks.'
+		'As you head through the metro station, you see two women standing on the platform waiting for the train dressed in latex body suits. Their heels are extremely tall and you imagine how much muscle control it must take just to stand in them, let alone walk.'
 		act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg	
 	end
 end
@@ -860,104 +857,104 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'train':
 		end
 	elseif metrorand = 8:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/girlcat.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you ride the metro, you notice a young woman sitting across from you, she is playing on her phone. But that is not what draws your attention to her, it is the large black cat sitting in her lap. The cat seems surprisingly calm, and happy considering the strange people around, and movement of the train. Occasionally she reaches down to pet the cat while playing on her phone. Once the metro comes to a stop, she lifts the cat then carries it in her arms, as she leaves the train.'
+		'As you ride the metro, you notice a young woman sitting across from you playing on her phone, but that''s not what draws your attention to her; she has large black cat sitting in her lap. The cat seems surprisingly calm and happy considering the strange people around. She occasionally reaches down to pet the cat while playing on her phone. Once the metro comes to a stop, she lifts the cat and carries it in her arms as she leaves the train.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 9:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/kilt.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you ride the metro, you notice a foreign man wearing a kilt. You overhear several other men commenting on him wearing a skirt, which he just ignores. He is likely used to such comments, as he has lived in Russia for a long time.'
+		'As you ride the metro, you notice a foreign man wearing a kilt. You overhear several other men commenting on him wearing a skirt, which he just ignores. He''s likely used to such comments as he has lived in Russia for a long time.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 10:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/manasleep.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you ride the metro, you notice a young man laying on the floor of the car, in front of one of the doors. He seems to be fast asleep, or maybe he is passed out. Several other people near his age are sitting near him, perhaps they are his friends, and are just taking him home. When your stop arrives everyone just steps over him, as they enter, or exit the metro. You quickly follow suit.'
+		'As you ride the metro, you notice a young man laying on the floor of the car in front of one of the doors. He seems to be fast asleep, or passed out. Several other people his age are sitting near him, likely his friends taking him home. When your stop arrives, everyone just steps over him as they enter or exit the train. You quickly follow suit.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 11:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/nakedg'+ rand(1,5) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman, she is wearing shoes, but other than that she is naked. She is sitting in one of the seats, as if riding the metro naked was the most normal thing in the world. At the very next stop she gets off, leaving you wondering why she was naked, and where she was going.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman wearing only a pair of shoes. She is strangely calm, as if riding the metro naked was the most normal thing in the world. She gets off at the next stop, leaving you wondering why she was naked, and where she was going.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 12:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/nakedm'+ rand(1,2) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a naked man. He acts as if, walking around naked; is the most normal thing in the world to do. At the very next stop he gets off, leaving you wondering why he was naked, and where he was going.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a naked man who acts as if walking around naked is the most normal thing in the world to do. He gets off at the next stop, leaving you wondering why he was naked, and where he was going.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 13:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/nakedgm1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice several naked men. They are laughing, and talking, they appear to be a little drunk. They seem to be aware of all the looks that they are getting, finding it amusing, than anything. They often wink at any of the women looking their way. At the very next stop, they get off, leaving you wondering why they were naked, and where they were going.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice several naked men who appear to be a little drunk as they laugh and talk. They seem to be aware of all the looks that they''re getting, finding it amusing more than anything. They often wink at any of the women looking their way. They all get off at the next stop, leaving you wondering why they were naked, and where they were going.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 14:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/3some1.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman half naked kneeling in one of the seats. A man behind her is fucking her roughly, while she sucks the cock of another man. This goes on for some time until both of the men cum inside of her in each of the hole they were using. Once done, they get dressed, and sit together then start talking among themselves. They remain on the train, as you get off at your stop.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman half naked kneeling in one of the seats, a man behind her fucking her roughly while she sucks the cock of another man. This goes on for some time until both of the men cum. Once done, they get dressed and sit together to start talking among themselves. They remain on the train as you get off at your stop.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 15:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman naked from the waist down, on all fours in the middle of the car. She seems to have a collar around her neck with a leash attached. Another woman is squatting in front of her, reaching back, pulling her butt checks apart. All while a man behind the kneeling woman grabs his cock and begins pounding her ass, the sounds of her cries makes it hard to tell, if she is enjoying the experience or not.'
-		'Once he finishes, the squatting woman reaches down, and grabs the leash then tightly pulls on it, almost choking the other girl. She and the man, talk for a bit, while the leashed girl stays on her knees, still naked from the waist down, but with cum running down her thighs. After their talk the man goes to take a seat, while the woman holding the leash, walks over to another spot to sit. Tugging on the leash to pull the other girl along, after a few more minutes, she leans over and whispers something to the leashed girl, who then gets dressed again, but remains kneeling at the feet, of what can only be, her dominatrix.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman naked from the waist down on all fours in the middle of the car. She seems to have a collar around her neck with a leash attached. Another woman is squatting in front of her while reaching back to pull her ass cheeks apart. A man behind the leashed girl grabs his cock and begins pounding her ass, the sounds of her cries making it hard to tell if she''s enjoying the experience or not.'
+		'Once he finishes, the squatting woman reaches down and grabs the leash before tightly pulling on it, almost choking the other girl. She and the man talk for a bit while the leashed girl stays on her knees with cum running down her thighs. After their talk, the man goes to take a seat while the woman holding the leash walks over to another spot to sit, tugging on the leash to pull the other girl along. After a few minutes, she leans over and whispers something to the leashed girl, who then gets dressed, but remains kneeling at the feet of what can only be her dominatrix.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 16:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/fingering1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman with her skirt pulled up and panties pushed aside being finger banged by a man in a suit. Her cries of ecstasy get louder, and louder, as he keeps it up until she finally climaxes, leaving her legs to buckle, forcing the man to catch her before she crumples to the floor. She leans against him, as he holds her tight, pulling her clothes back in place. You can hear them laughing at the attention they got, she is blushing, and they quickly exit at the next stop.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman with her skirt pulled up and panties pushed aside being finger banged by a man in a suit. Her cries of ecstasy get louder and louder until she finally climaxes, causing her legs to buckle, forcing the man to catch her before she crumples to the floor. She leans against him as he holds her tight, pulling her clothes back in place. You can hear them laughing at the attention they got before they quickly exit at the next stop.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 17:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/fuck'+ rand(1,3) +'.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a couple having intercourse in the car. They are going at each other like animals. Many people are watching them, some even pull out their smart phones, recording them. They switch between several sex positions during the ride, getting more and more turned on. The man seems to have a lot of stamina, as they are still going at it hard, as you leave the car at your end station.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a couple having intercourse in the car, going at each other like animals. Many people are watching them, some even pulling out their phones to record them. They switch between several sex positions during the ride, getting more and more turned on. The man seems to have a lot of stamina, as they are still going at it as you leave the car at your stop.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 18:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/les1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a girl kneeling in her seat; facing the wrong way. Her skirt is pulled up, and her panties are down around her knees. Another girl is squatting behind her eating her pussy. This goes on for several minutes until the first girl finally has an orgasm, once she''s finished, she gets dressed, and sits by her friend. For the rest of the ride, they keep making out, leaving the car at the next stop.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a girl kneeling in her seat facing the wrong way. Her skirt is pulled up, and her panties are down around her knees as another girl squats behind her, eating her pussy. This goes on for several minutes until the girl finally has an orgasm. Once she''s finished, she gets dressed and sits by her friend. They make out for the remainder of their journey, leaving the car at the next stop.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 19:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/boystuffed1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a young man close to your own age across form you. He seems to be asleep clutching a stuffed animal tightly in his arms. Several of the other passengers give him amused looks.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a young man close to your own age across from you. He seems to be fast asleep while clutching a stuffed animal tightly in his arms. Several of the other passengers give him amused looks.'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 20:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/girlsbff'+ rand(1,2) +'.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, there is some girls across the way horsing around. They are talking loudly and goofing off, the seem to be having fun but they are also annoying several of the other passengers.'
+		'As you find a seat, you see some girls horsing around, talking loudly and goofing off. While they seem to be having fun, they''re also annoying several of the other passengers.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 21:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/passedoutg1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman leaned over in the seat across from you. You can smell the alcohol from here, she seems to be passed out. Most of the other passengers ignore her but you noticed a couple of men eying her.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman passed out in the seat across from you; you can smell the alcohol from here. Most of the other passengers ignore her, but you notice more than a few men eying her.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 22:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sleepb1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a young guy sound asleep snoring across from you, he has managed to cram himself akwardly into the seat. You don''t know how he manged to get comfortable enough to fall asleep. You imagine he will be sore when he waked up.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a young man sound asleep snoring across from you, having managed to cram himself akwardly into the seat. You don''t know how he manged to get comfortable enough to fall asleep, but imagine he will be sore when he wakes up.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 23:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sleepcouple.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you a couple across the way. The man is sitting up with his hand handing down, his eyes are closed and it sounds like he is snoring. The woman is laying on the seat next to him with her head in his lap.'
+		'As you find a seat, you a couple across from you. The man is sitting up and snoring while the woman is laying on the seat next to him with her head in his lap.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 24:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sleepexf1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman across from you. She seems to be passed out, you can smell the alcohol from here. Her jacket is open is open and her shirt pulled down, leaving one of her breasts exposed for everyone to see. Several passengers give her a glance now and a again. A few even take her pictures, a group of young guys are whispering to each other and laughing while watching her.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman passed out across from you; you can smell the alcohol from here. Her jacket is open and her shirt pulled down, leaving one of her breasts exposed for everyone to see. Several passengers give her a glance now and again, and a few even take her picture. A group of young men are whispering to each other and laughing while watching her.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 5
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 25:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sleepg1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman laying in the seat across from yours sound asleep, most of the passengers ignore her. Though one man seems to be watching her, you don''t know if he knows her or is thinking about doing something.'
+		'As you find a seat, you notice a woman laying in the seat across from yours sound asleep. Most of the passengers ignore her, though one man seems to be watching her. You don''t know if he knows her or is thinking about doing something.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 26 and (hour = 7 or hour = 15):
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big77.jpg"></center>'
@@ -965,37 +962,37 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'train':
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 27:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/dog.jpg"></center>'
-		'It seems as if some of the famous "Moscow Metro Dogs" have made their way to St. Petersburg. You heard about them on the news awhile back, but today was the first day you''ve seen one for yourself. It was pretty cute and it made you happy to see the other passengers petting it and being generally kind to the animal. Still, you don''t think the public metro is really a place for a dog to be, and wonder about taking it home with you, or at least to the local animal shelter. Before you can inspect it''s collar however, the metro doors open and the dog trots away.'
+		'It seems as if some of the famous "Moscow Metro Dogs" have made their way to St. Petersburg. You heard about them on the news a while back, but today was the first day you''ve seen one for yourself. It was pretty cute and it made you happy to see the other passengers petting it. Still, you don''t think the public metro is really a place for a dog to be, and wonder about taking it home with you, or at least to the local animal shelter. Before you can inspect it''s collar however, the metro doors open and the dog trots away.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 28:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/mannequin.jpg"></center>'
-		'Sitting across from you is a woman who is hauling some sort of mannequin around in a bag. You wonder what it''s for or where she''s going. Maybe she''s a clothing designer or something? No one else seems to think it''s unusual though, so you shrug it off and play on your phone for the rest of the trip. Just another day on the metro.'
+		'Sitting across from you is a woman who is hauling some sort of mannequin around in a bag. You wonder what it''s for or where she''s going. Maybe she''s a clothing designer or something? No one else seems to think it''s unusual though, so you shrug it off and play on your phone for the rest of the trip.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 29:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/mask.jpg"></center>'
-		'You honestly don''t understand how some people get to be the way they are. But such is life in the big city! You just never know what you''re going to encounter, especially on the metro. You wonder if this person is asleep under their mask as they''re sitting there as still as a statue. Another curious passenger must be thinking the same thing and walks up to him, cautiously reaching out to touch his mask. Suddenly, the masked man jumps to life and starts barking and growling at the lady who dared to touch him! She darts away into the crowd of other passengers, who are now trying to see what all the commotion is about. As soon as you reach your destination, you get up quickly and leave the bizarre scene.'
+		'You honestly don''t understand how some people get to be the way they are, but such is life in the big city! You just never know what you''re going to encounter, especially on the metro. You wonder if this person is asleep under their mask as they''re sitting there as still as a statue. Another curious passenger must be thinking the same thing and walks up to him, cautiously reaching out to touch his mask. Suddenly, the masked man jumps to life and starts barking and growling at the lady, who darts away into the crowd of other passengers, who are now trying to see what all the commotion is about. As soon as you reach your destination, you get up quickly and leave the bizarre scene.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 30:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/oldman_nipples.jpg"></center>'
-		'You take a seat on the metro and wait for it to head to your destination. Across from you sits an older man, who appears to be rather scruffy and dirty. You wonder if maybe he''s homeless, or just poor, and you almost feel sorry for him for a moment. That''s when he opens his jacket and reveals a very provocative women''s top, with the nipples cut out of it! A woman a few seats away shouts "oh my God!" and starts to film the man with her phone. He then starts making lewd faces at her while tweaking his nipples, clearly liking the attention.'
+		'You take a seat on the metro and wait for it to head to your destination. Across from you sits an older man, who appears to be rather scruffy and dirty. You wonder if he''s homeless, or just poor, and almost feel sorry for him. That''s when he opens his jacket and reveals a very provocative women''s top, with the nipples cut out of it. A woman a few seats away shouts "Oh my God!" and starts to film the man with her phone, who starts making lewd faces at her while tweaking his nipples, clearly liking the attention.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 31:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/police.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you take your spot in the metro, you notice a police officer standing across from you, staring at you the moment you come in. You try to ignore him the best you can by looking down at your phone or around to the other passengers. Whenever you glance back up at him however, he''s still staring right at your face. You don''t think he''s even blinked once! Does he know me from somewhere or something? What''s his problem? you think to yourself.'
+		'As you take your spot in the metro, you notice a police officer standing across from you, staring at you. You try to ignore him the best you can by looking down at your phone or around to the other passengers. Whenever you glance back up at him however, he''s still staring right at you. You don''t think he''s even blinked once. "What''s his problem?" you think to yourself.'
 		'You do your best to turn away from his creepy stare, but there''s only so much you can do. Even as the metro pulls up to your stop, you cast one more peek in his direction and he''s still staring right into your eyes.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 32:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/rude.jpg"></center>'
-		'The metro is mostly empty today. A lady sits across from you and you close your eyes here and there, almost dozing off. That''s when a man enters the metro and sits right next to the woman and spreads his legs wide, pressing them into her. There is plenty of room in the metro for this guy to sit, so he''s either being intentionally rude or intentionally creepy. He has one of his hands underneath the bags he''s holding and it seems to be moving slightly...Is he touching himself? Gross! The woman doesn''t tolerate this for long and huffs loudly, sliding down the bench to get away from him. He doesn''t follow her, but continues to sit there while breathing heavily through his mouth, his arm still moving under the bag.'
+		'The metro is mostly empty today. A lady sits across from you and you close your eyes here and there, almost dozing off. That''s when a man enters the metro and sits right next to the woman and spreads his legs wide, pressing them into her. There is plenty of room in the metro for this guy to sit, so he''s either being intentionally rude or intentionally creepy. He has one of his hands underneath the bags he''s holding and it seems to be moving slightly... Is he touching himself? Gross! The woman doesn''t tolerate this for long and huffs loudly, sliding down the bench to get away from him. He doesn''t follow her, but continues to sit there while breathing heavily through his mouth, his arm still moving under the bag.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	elseif metrorand = 33:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/toclose.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'The metro is exceptionally packed today, with most of the younger passengers opting to stand to let the elderly take the limited seats. As the metro beings to move, a middle aged man with chiseled features stands next to you, placing his hand very near yours on the pole. You were there first and so you hold your ground, trying to not to move as the metro car twists and turns along it''s track. But the rocking of the train causes the man''s body to occasionally press up against your own.'
-		'Why is he standing so close to me? Who even does this? Is he going to try something? you think to yourself, your mind preparing for the worst. For the remainder of the trip, the stranger never says a word to you and never intentionally touches any part of your body, but he is definitely too close for comfort. When the train finally comes to a stop, you push towards the doors the second they open and get out of the station as quickly as you can.'
+		'The metro is exceptionally packed today, with most of the younger passengers opting to stand to let the elderly take the limited seats. As the metro beings to move, a middle aged man with chiseled features stands next to you, placing his hand very near yours on the pole. You were there first and so you hold your ground, trying to not to move as the metro car twists and turns along it''s track, but the rocking of the train causes the man''s body to occasionally press up against your own.'
+		'"Why is he standing so close to me? Is he going to try something?" you think to yourself, your mind preparing for the worst. For the remainder of the trip, the stranger never says a word to you and never intentionally touches any part of your body, but he is definitely too close for comfort. When the train finally comes to a stop, you push towards the doors the second they open and get out of the station as quickly as you can.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/kilt.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you ride the metro, you notice a foreign man wearing a kilt. You overhear several other men commenting on him wearing a skirt, which he just ignores. He is likely used to such comments, as he has lived in Russia for a long time.'
+		'As you ride the metro, you notice a foreign man wearing a kilt. You overhear several other men commenting on him wearing a skirt, which he just ignores. He''s likely used to such comments as he has lived in Russia for a long time.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'metro', 'start'
 	end
 end
@@ -1004,7 +1001,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbc':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 3
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/metrorestroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk over to them. The one that pulled his pants down says to you in badly accented Russian, it sounds like he might be from somewhere in Africa. "Come lets go have some fun, yes?" He points off, you turn to follow where he is pointing and you see he is pointing at the restrooms, you know what they want, to have sex with you in the mens room.'
+	'You walk over to them. "Come, let''s go have some fun, yes?" the one who pulled his pants down says to you in badly accented Russian; it sounds like he might be from Africa. He points and you turn to that he''s pointing at the restrooms. It''s clear what they want.'
 	gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 		act 'Tell them no (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -1012,7 +1009,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbc':
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/no.jpg"></center>'
-			'You shake your head no and step away, as you do they both frown. "No sorry. I was just playing I didn''t mean to tease you." You tell them and then turn and hurry away.'
+			'You shake your head and step away, causing them both to frown. "Sorry, I was just playing. I didn''t mean to tease you," you tell them before turning and hurrying away.'
 			act 'Leave':minut += 5 & gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
 	else
@@ -1021,8 +1018,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbc':
 	act 'Go with them':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You decided why not, a little risk is always fun. Sure someone might come in a catch you with them but then again maybe no one will. As soon as you walk in the mens room, one of them takes you over near the stalls and starts kissing you. While his friend seems to be doing something at the door, you''re not sure what and you really don''t care at this moment.'
-		'After a couple of minutes of kissing he pushes you down by your shoulders.'
+		'You decide to go with them. As soon as you walk in the mens room, one of them takes you over near the stalls and starts kissing you while his friend seems to be doing something at the door.'
+		'After a few minutes of kissing, he pushes you down by your shoulders.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'exhibitionism'
 		gs 'stat'
 		gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
@@ -1032,7 +1029,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbc':
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbcno.jpg"></center>'
-				'You pull away so he can''t push you down anymore and then you shake your head. "I''m sorry I can''t do this." You turn and rush to the door where the other one is, at first it looks like he might stop you, but his friend behind you says something you don''t understand and then he steps aside. You rush out of the mens room, breathing heavily.'
+				'You pull away and shake your head. "I''m sorry, but I can''t do this." You turn and rush to the door where the other one is; it looks like he might stop you, but his friend says something you don''t understand and he steps aside. You rush out of the mens room, breathing heavily.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -1044,27 +1041,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbc':
 		act 'Squat':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You squat down and rub his crotch through his pants, you can feel his cock is already rock hard. He looks down at you and in accented Russian says. "Suck it." There is really no doubt what he means by it, he seems to speak Russian better than his friend. Who seems to be trying to jam something under the door.'
+			'You squat down and rub his crotch through his pants; his cock is already rock hard. He looks down at you and in accented Russian says "Suck it." He seems to speak Russian better than his friend, who seems to be trying to jam something under the door.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'exhibitionism'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Suck his dick':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc3.jpg"></center>'
-				'You drop down to your knees as you unbutton his pants, you reach inside and pull his cock free. You stroke it several times before opening your mouth. You take his cock into your mouth, wrapping your lips tightly around the shaft and begin bobbing your head up and down as you suck his cock. While you are sucking his dick you notice his friend walks back over and they exchange a few words in a language you don''t recognize. After their exchange of words the other guy pulls his dick out of your mouth and they trades places.'
+				'You drop down to your knees as you unbutton his pants before reaching inside and pulling his cock free. You stroke it several times before opening your mouth. You take his cock into your mouth, wrapping your lips tightly around the shaft and bobbing your head up and down as you suck his cock. While you''re sucking his dick, you notice his friend walking back over and they exchange a few words in a language you don''t recognize. After their exchange of words, the other guy pulls his dick out of your mouth and they trade places.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 3, 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Suck the other dick':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc4.jpg"></center>'
-					'As soon as he steps in place of where his friend was, his dick already out, you wrap your lips around his dick and start sucking it. The other one now walks to the other side of you, you reach over to play with his balls and jerk him off at the same time. By the sounds of their moans and tone of voice when they talk to each other in that language you don''t understand they sound happy anyways.'
+					'As soon as he steps in place of where his friend was, his dick already out, you wrap your lips around his dick and start sucking it. The other one now walks to the other side of you, and you reach over to play with his balls and jerk him off at the same time. By the sounds of their moans and tone of voice when they talk to each other, they sound happy.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'exhibitionism', 'group'
 					gs 'arousal', 'hj', -5, 'exhibitionism', 'group'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Suck the other dick':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Soon you start switching which dick you are sucking while you jerk the other one off, trying to keep them both happy. Part of you is thrilled at the excitement of blowing two guy in a public mens room. Even more so because they are black and you know some people are still racist, just makes it all the more exciting. The one you are jerking off starts stripping you while waiting for his turn to get sucked off again, before long you find yourself naked, between them.'
-						'Once you are naked the one you are not sucking tries to get you to stand up and bend over, he is obviously wanting to fuck you.'
+						'You start switching which dick you''re sucking while you jerk the other one off, trying to keep them both happy. Part of you is thrilled at the excitement of blowing two guys in a public mens room, even more so because they are black. The one you are jerking off starts stripping you while waiting for his turn.'
+						'Once you''re naked, the one you''re not sucking tries to get you to stand up and bend over.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'exhibitionism', 'group'
 						gs 'arousal', 'hj', -5, 'exhibitionism', 'group'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -1082,14 +1079,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbc':
 						act 'Get fucked':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc6.jpg"></center>'
-							'You stand up while you keep sucking his friend, leaving you bent over. You feel the head of his hard dick rubbing against your slit, getting the head of his cock and your pussy wet in the process. Once he is convinced you are wet enough, he slides his dick in your pussy. You feel it filling you up, you moan softly around the cock in your mouth. He starts fucking you hard and fast almost at once.'
+							'You stand up while you keep sucking his friend, leaving you bent over. You feel the head of his hard dick rubbing against your slit, getting the head of his cock and your pussy wet in the process. Once he''s convinced you''re wet enough, he slides his dick into your pussy. You feel it filling you up and moan softly around the cock in your mouth. He starts fucking you hard and fast almost at once.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub', 'rough'
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', -5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub','rough'
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Get fucked again':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc7.jpg"></center>'
-								'After a few minutes the one who''s dick you are sucking says something to his friend and soon both of them pull out of you. They switch places, you find a wet dick covered in your pussy juices shoved in your mouth. You start sucking on it at once, almost at the same time you feel the other dick shoved in your wet pussy and almost at once starts fucking you hard and rough. Several minutes go by, when the one fucking you spits on your ass and you feel him working the spit into your asshole with his finger, you know what comes next.'
+								'After a few minutes, the one whose dick you''re sucking says something to his friend and soon both of them pull out of you. They switch places and you find a wet dick covered in your pussy juices shoved into your mouth. You start sucking on it as you feel the other dick being shoved into your wet pussy and fucking you hard and rough. Several minutes go by before the one fucking you spits on your ass and you feel him working the spit into your asshole with his finger.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub', 'rough'
 								gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', -5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub', 'rough'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -1107,7 +1104,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbc':
 								act 'Take it up the ass':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc8.jpg"></center>'
-									'He pulls his dick out of you and rubs the tip against your anus. Then pushes against against it until the head of his cock pops into your ass. Causing you to groan a little in pain and moan in pleasure. He starts fucking your butt as you suck his friends dick, it doesn''t take him very long until he works his cock balls deep in your ass and starts hammering away at it. They excitedly talk back and forth laughing, if you had to guess the one in your ass is telling his friend he is fucking your butt.'
+									'He pulls his dick out of you and rubs the tip against your anus before pushing against against it until the head of his cock pops into your ass, causing you to groan in pain. He starts fucking your ass as you suck his friend''s dick, and it doesn''t take him very long until he works his cock balls deep into your ass and starts hammering away at it. They excitedly talk back and forth while laughing.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub', 'rough'
 									gs 'arousal', 'anal', -5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub', 'rough'
 									gs 'pain', 1, 'asshole', 'stretch'
@@ -1115,9 +1112,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbc':
 									act 'Another ass pounding':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/sex/station/2bbc9.jpg"></center>'
-										'It looks like you were correct, after a few minutes the ones who dick you are sucking starts saying something urgently, by a guess you think he wants to trade positions. Sure enough they both pull out of you and walk around you, switching positions. The one that was just in your ass does make a detour to grab some toilet paper, which he uses to wipe off his dick, before walking over to shove it back in your mouth.'
-										*nl
-										'While his friend wasting no time shoves his cock in your much loser asshole, it actually slides in fairly easily since the stretching it already got. He very quickly works himself balls deep in your ass, he grabs you by the hips as he starts hammering away at your ass, just as fast and furiously as he can. Several minutes of this goes by until they both pull out of you, the one just in your ass does what his friend did and cleans his dick up with some toilet paper.'
+										'After a few minutes, the one whose dick you''re sucking starts saying something urgently before they both pull out of you and walk around you, switching positions. The one that was just in your ass does make a detour to grab some toilet paper, which he uses to wipe off his dick before walking over to shove it back in your mouth.'
+										'His friend wastes no time and shoves his cock into your much looser asshole. He very quickly works himself balls deep into your ass, grabbing you by the hips as he starts hammering away at your ass as fast as he can. Several minutes of this go by until they both pull out of you.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub', 'rough'
 										gs 'arousal', 'anal', -5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub', 'rough'
 										gs 'pain', 1, 'asshole', 'stretch'
@@ -1137,8 +1133,8 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'twobbcfinish':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/metro/metrorestroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'You get down on your knees between them and alternate between sucking one dick and jerking the other one back and forth until they both start to moan. At that point you start jerking them both off, with their dicks pointed at your face. Moments later the first hot stream of cum splatters on your face and some down on your tits, almost at the same time you get hit by another splatter of cum on the other side of your face. They both let out several spurts of cum covering your face and tits with their sperm.'
-	'With them both finished they laugh and quickly get dressed, just as they start to leave the one that speaks better Russian stops and says. "Thank you, you are very good fuck." Then they both walk out leaving you naked and covered in their cum. You get up and start getting dressed yourself.'
+	'You get down on your knees between them and alternate between sucking one dick and jerking the other one back and forth until they both start to moan. At that point, you start jerking them both off with their dicks pointed at your face. Seconds later, streams of cum start splattering across your face and dripping onto your breasts.'
+	'Once they finish, they laugh and quickly get dressed. "Thank you, you are very good fuck," one of the says before they both walk out, leaving you naked and covered in their cum. You get up and start getting dressed yourself.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub'
 	gs 'arousal', 'hj', -5, 'exhibitionism', 'group', 'sub'
 	gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'unknown African man'