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[text edit] text fixes to HotelWork by az133

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@@ -756,11 +756,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 				if IgorevnaBDSM = 0:
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/1.jpg"></center>'
 					if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-						'To your surprise you see Lariska''s mom, Anna Igorevna. You gasp in surprise.'
+						'You are taken aback to see Lariska''s mom, Anna Igorevna. You gasp in surprise.'
 					else
-						'You see a middle age woman, brunette, about the same age of your mother and a blonde younger woman. You gasp in surprise.'
+						'You see a middle age woman, brunette, about the same age of your mother and a younger blonde woman. You gasp in surprise.'
 					end
-					'She''s hitting the other girl with a crop. The blonde is panting, bent over the tv waiting for the session to end, suddenly you hear three loud slaps against the flesh. The session seems to have finished...'
+					'She''s hitting the other girl with a crop. The blonde is panting, bent over the TV waiting for the session to end. Suddenly you hear three loud slaps against the flesh. The session seems to have finished...'
 					
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 10
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -770,12 +770,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 						IgorevnaBDSM += 1
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/2.jpg"></center>'
 						if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-							'The blonde girl drops on the floor clearly exhausted. Anna is hitting and teasing softly the blonde''s pussy with the crop, she seems pleased by this action as she''s moaning, beginning for more.'
+							'The blonde girl drops on the floor clearly exhausted. Anna is softly hitting and teasing the blonde''s pussy with the crop. She seems pleased by this as she''s moaning, begging for more.'
 						else
-							'The blonde girl drops on the floor clearly exhausted. The brunette woman is hitting and teasing softly the blonde''s pussy with the crop, she seems pleased by this action as she''s moaning as, begging for more.'
+							'The blonde girl drops on the floor clearly exhausted. The brunette woman is softly hitting and teasing the blonde''s pussy with the crop. She seems pleased by this as she''s moaning, begging for more.'
 						end
 						'The blonde is loudly moaning. While the other woman is yelling at her;'
-						'"Do you want your reward? Beg for it!"'+iif(lariskaMotherKnown = 1, ' Anna says.', ' The brunette says.')
+						'"Do you want your reward? Beg for it!"'+iif(lariskaMotherKnown = 1, ' Anna says.', ' the brunette says.')
 						'The other woman only manages to let out some muffled cries...'
 						gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 10
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -801,11 +801,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 								if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
 									'Anna yanks the blonde''s chain leash to follow after her while she lays on the table.'
 									'The blonde is blissfully following closely after, obeying the mistress.'
-									'Anna spreads her legs and tells her slave, "Here''s your reward slut..." You decide it''s time to leave, it''s not professional and you don''t want to get caught.'
+									'Anna spreads her legs and tells her slave, "Here''s your reward slut..." You decide it''s time to leave. It''s not professional, and you don''t want to get caught.'
 								else
 									'The woman yanks the blonde''s chain leash to follow after her while she lays on the table.'
 									'The blonde is blissfully following closely after, obeying the mistress.'
-									'Anna spreads her legs and tells her slave, "Here''s your reward slut..." You decide it''s time to leave, it''s not professional and you don''t want to get caught.'
+									'The woman spreads her legs and tells her slave, "Here''s your reward slut..." You decide it''s time to leave. It''s not professional, and you don''t want to get caught.'
 								end
 								gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 10
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -817,7 +817,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 					end
 				elseif IgorevnaBDSM = 1:				
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/5.jpg"></center>'
-					'After the previous experience with this room, you carefully approach it as you''re expecting to see another act but this blows your expectations away...'
+					'After the previous experience with this room, you carefully approach it as you''re expecting to see another act, but this blows your expectations away...'
 					if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
 						'Anna, is on her knees completely naked, collared and leashed by a woman you''ve never seen before.'
 					else
@@ -831,7 +831,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 						IgorevnaBDSM += 1
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/6.jpg"></center>'
-						'Her nipples are pinched with nipples pincher''s and all of her limbs are cuffed...'
+						'Her nipples are pinched with nipple clamps and all of her limbs are cuffed...'
 						if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
 							'The other woman gently taps Anna between her legs with a whip, and she seems to enjoy it! You remember the last time, the woman being subjective this time was dominating a woman last time... It''s making you quite confused... and aroused.'
 						else
@@ -844,11 +844,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/7.jpg"></center>'
 							if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-								'"Crawl to me and start lick my boots!" The woman commands. Without objecting, Anna crawls to the woman and starts licking her boots.'
+								'"Crawl to me and start licking my boots!" The woman commands. Without objecting, Anna crawls to the woman and starts licking her boots.'
 								'<i>Is she willingly letting her have this control over her?</i> You wonder.'
 								'"Good girl, and now is the time for your reward. Here, put this on. You will need it." Says the other woman as she hands over a bite and a leather strap to Anna.'
 							else
-								'"Crawl to me and start lick my boots!" The woman commands. Without objecting, the brunette crawls to the woman and starts licking her boots.'
+								'"Crawl to me and start licking my boots!" The woman commands. Without objecting, the brunette crawls to the woman and starts licking her boots.'
 								'<i>Is she willingly letting her have this control over her?</i> You wonder.'
 								'"Good girl, and now is the time for your reward. Here, put this on. You will need it." Says the other woman as she hands over a bite and a leather strap to her.'
 							end
@@ -859,13 +859,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/8.jpg"></center>'
 								if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-									'Anna quietly obey''s and puts the bite and the straps on herself. Then she places herself on some kind of gym bench spreading herself to the unknown woman.' 
+									'Anna quietly obeys and puts the bite and the straps on herself. Then she places herself on some kind of gym bench spreading herself to the unknown woman.' 
 									'The woman chains her arms and legs to the bench, "Take it bitch! I''ll teach you your place." she yells as she starts whipping Anna.'
-									'You watch them for some time flabbergasted of what you''re seeing, and after a while you feel you''ve seen enough as you decide to leave.'
+									'You watch them for some time flabbergasted by what you''re seeing, and after a while you feel you''ve seen enough as you decide to leave.'
 								else
-									'The brunette quietly obey''s and puts the bite and the straps on herself. Then she places herself on some kind of gym bench spreading herself to the unknown woman.' 
+									'The brunette quietly obeys and puts the bite and the straps on herself. Then she places herself on some kind of gym bench spreading herself to the unknown woman.' 
 									'The woman chains her arms and legs to the bench, "Take it bitch! I''ll teach you your place." she yells as she starts whipping the brunette.'
-									'You watch them for some time flabbergasted of what you''re seeing, and after a while you feel you''ve seen enough as you decide to leave.'
+									'You watch them for some time flabbergasted by what you''re seeing, and after a while you feel you''ve seen enough as you decide to leave.'
 								end
 								gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -878,16 +878,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 				elseif IgorevnaBDSM = 2:				
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/9.jpg"></center>'
 					if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-						'While passing by the room where you''ve seen Lariska''s mom, you hear a male voice. Curious as you are you decide to take a peek to still your curiosity.'
+						'While passing by the room where you''ve seen Lariska''s mom, you hear a male voice. Curious as you are, you decide to take a peek to still your curiosity.'
 						'As you gently open the door you see Anna completely naked wearing only a pair of gloves and pantyhose. You''ve missed most of the initial encounter between them, but from what you were able to pick up is that she''s not in danger.'
-						'And instead they seem to agree on something, "Now I''ll put the gag back. You can start to moan when I''ll tell you. Are we clear?" the man say pulling her hair and groping her marvelous boobs.' 
-						'Anna, not able to move as her hands are tied to a rope pending from the ceiling. Not letting out a sound she simply nods; you can say from her expression that she''s affected by his groping. Her boobs must be really sensitive.'
+						'Instead they seem to agree on something, "Now I''ll put the gag back. You can start to moan when I tell you. Are we clear?" the man says pulling her hair and groping her marvelous boobs.' 
+						'Anna, unable to move because her hands are tied to a rope pending from the ceiling, simply nods without making a sound. You can see from her expression that she''s effected by his groping. Her boobs must be really sensitive.'
 						'As the man removes the gag, she quietly answers, "Thank you, master..."'
 					else
-						'While passing by the room where you''ve seen the brunette, you hear a male voice. Curious as you are you decide to take a peek to still your curiosity.'
+						'While passing by the room where you''ve seen the brunette, you hear a male voice. Curious as you are, you decide to take a peek to still your curiosity.'
 						'As you gently open the door you see her completely naked wearing only a pair of gloves and pantyhose. You''ve missed most of the initial encounter between them, but from what you were able to pick up is that she''s not in danger.'
-						'And instead they seem to agree on something, "Now I''ll put the gag back. You can start to moan when I''ll tell you. Are we clear?" the man say pulling her hair and groping her marvelous boobs.' 
-						'The brunette, not able to move as her hands are tied to a rope pending from the ceiling. Not letting out a sound she simply nods; you can say from her expression that she''s affected by his groping. Her boobs must be really sensitive.'
+						'Instead they seem to agree on something, "Now I''ll put the gag back. You can start to moan when I tell you. Are we clear?" the man says pulling her hair and groping her marvelous boobs.' 
+						'The brunette, unable to move because her hands are tied to a rope pending from the ceiling, simply nods without making a sound. You can see from her expression that she''s effected by his groping. Her boobs must be really sensitive.'
 						'As the man removes the gag, she quietly answers, "Thank you, master..."'
 					end
 					
@@ -908,11 +908,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/11.jpg"></center>'
 							if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-								'The man completely strips Anna naked as he takes out a blindfold and covers her eyes, then he binds her arms and ankles to a wooden pillar in the middle of the room with a rope, while another rope link together her tiptoe and the blindfold...'
-								'"Now for your reward." the man take out a vibrator from the bag laying on the floor and put it between Anna''s legs, teasing her clit...'
+								'The man completely strips Anna naked as he takes out a blindfold and covers her eyes. Then he binds her arms and ankles to a wooden pillar in the middle of the room with a rope, while another rope links together her tiptoe and the blindfold...'
+								'"Now for your reward." the man take out a vibrator from the bag laying on the floor and puts it between Anna''s legs, teasing her clit...'
 							else
-								'The man completely strips the brunette naked as he takes out a blindfold and covers her eyes, then he binds her arms and ankles to a wooden pillar in the middle of the room with a rope, while another rope link together her tiptoe and the blindfold...'
-								'"Now for your reward." the man take out a vibrator from the bag laying on the floor and put it between brunette''s legs, teasing her clit...'
+								'The man completely strips the brunette naked as he takes out a blindfold and covers her eyes. Then he binds her arms and ankles to a wooden pillar in the middle of the room with a rope, while another rope links together her tiptoe and the blindfold...'
+								'"Now for your reward." the man take out a vibrator from the bag laying on the floor and puts it between the brunette''s legs, teasing her clit...'
 							end
 							gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -921,15 +921,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/12.jpg"></center>'
 								if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-									'As the vibrator is pleasing Anna, the man close the bag and takes a seat on a chair admiring his work; "Now to start the show..." he snickers.'
-									'He takes the controller and turn it on the vibrator. You can hear the buzz and immediately she start to moan. You can''t take off your eyes off Anna, she''s clearly liking this, you can tell it by her constant moves in search of the head of the vibrator.'
-									'Getting too aroused, she looses control and pushes the vibrator too far away and struggles to reach it again, the man quickly jumps up from the chair and immediately push it towards her dripping wet pussy as if he doesn''t want anything else then to see her climax.'
-									'Seeing all of this play out is such a turn on... you are not sure of what is peaking your interest, but the whole situation is making you wet. You decide that''s better to let them finish in peace so you silently close the door and turn back to your duties.'
+									'As the vibrator is pleasing Anna, the man closes the bag and takes a seat on a chair admiring his work; "Now to start the show..." he snickers.'
+									'He takes the controller and uses it to turn on the vibrator. You can hear the buzz and immediately she starts to moan. You can''t take your eyes off Anna. She''s clearly liking this. You can tell by her constant moves in search of the head of the vibrator.'
+									'Getting too aroused, she looses control and pushes the vibrator too far away and struggles to reach it again. The man quickly jumps up from the chair and immediately push it towards her dripping wet pussy as if he doesn''t want anything but to see her climax.'
+									'Seeing all of this play out is such a turn on... You are not sure of what is peaking your interest, but the whole situation is making you wet. You decide it''s better to let them finish in peace, so you silently close the door and turn back to your duties.'
 								else
-									'As the vibrator is pleasing the brunette, the man close the bag and takes a seat on a chair admiring his work; "Now to start the show..." he snickers.'
-									'He takes the controller and turn it on the vibrator. You can hear the buzz and immediately she start to moan. You can''t take off your eyes off her, as she''s clearly liking this, you can tell it by her constant moves in search of the head of the vibrator.'
-									'Getting too aroused, she looses control and pushes the vibrator too far away and struggles to reach it again, the man quickly jumps up from the chair and immediately push it towards her dripping wet pussy as if he doesn''t want anything else then to see her climax.'
-									'Seeing all of this play out is such a turn on... you are not sure of what is peaking your interest, but the whole situation is making you wet. You decide that''s better to let them finish in peace so you silently close the door and turn back to your duties.'
+									'As the vibrator is pleasing the brunette, the man closes the bag and takes a seat on a chair admiring his work; "Now to start the show..." he snickers.'
+									'He takes the controller and uses it to turn on the vibrator. You can hear the buzz and immediately she starts to moan. You can''t take your eyes off her. She''s clearly liking this. You can tell by her constant moves in search of the head of the vibrator.'
+									'Getting too aroused, she looses control and pushes the vibrator too far away and struggles to reach it again. The man quickly jumps up from the chair and immediately push it towards her dripping wet pussy as if he doesn''t want anything but to see her climax.'
+									'Seeing all of this play out is such a turn on... You are not sure of what is peaking your interest, but the whole situation is making you wet. You decide it''s better to let them finish in peace, so you silently close the door and turn back to your duties.'
 								end
 								gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -942,13 +942,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 				elseif IgorevnaBDSM = 3:				
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/13.jpg"></center>'
 					if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-						'You pass near the room that usually Lariska''s mother rents... you''re used by now as she always rents the same room. Maybe she''s some kind of whore that likes to be dominated you wonder as you hear some voices come from the room, someone is definitively in there. You decide to look in and slightly open the door...'
+						'You pass near the room that Lariska''s mother usually rents... <font color = #DC143C>Maybe she''s some kind of whore that likes to be dominated</font> you wonder as you hear some voices come from the room. Someone is definitely in there. You decide to look in and open the door slightly...'
 						'Anna is standing next to a buff young man wearing nothing but a necktie...'
-						'<font color = #DC143C>''He''s probably a stripper man, she probably pays for him, not only being payed for...''</font> is your first thought. But then your attention focus towards something shiny... <font color = #DC143C>''What the hell, are those nipple pincher''s...?''</font>'
+						'<font color = #DC143C>''He''s probably a male stripper, she probably pays for him, not only being paid for...''</font> is your first thought. But then your attention focuses on something shiny... <font color = #DC143C>''What the hell, are those nipple clamps...?''</font>'
 					else
-						'You pass near the room that usually the brunette rents... you''re used by now as she always rents the same room. Maybe she''s some kind of whore that likes to be dominated you wonder as you hear some voices come from the room, someone is definitively in there. You decide to look in and slightly open the door...'
+						'You pass near the room that the brunette usually rents... <font color = #DC143C>Maybe she''s some kind of whore that likes to be dominated</font> you wonder as you hear some voices come from the room. Someone is definitely in there. You decide to look in and open the door slightly...'
 						'The woman is standing next to a buff young man wearing nothing but a necktie...'
-						'<font color = #DC143C>''He''s probably a stripper man, she probably pays for him, not only being payed for...''</font> is your first thought. But then your attention focus towards something shiny... <font color = #DC143C>''What the hell, are those nipple pincher''s...?''</font>'
+						'<font color = #DC143C>''He''s probably a male stripper, she probably pays for him, not only being paid for...''</font> is your first thought. But then your attention focuses on something shiny... <font color = #DC143C>''What the hell, are those nipple clamps...?''</font>'
 					end
 					
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
@@ -960,16 +960,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/14.jpg"></center>'
 						if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
 							'You are having a hard time processing what is happening as Anna suddenly slaps his face few times, "You have been behaving really bad... really really bad."'
-							'"I-I''m sorry... I''ll do better..." the man tries to plead with Anna...'
-							'"All I hear are promises... Is all that I get to hear from you?"'
-							'"What the fuck is going here?" you quietly mumble. Anna continues on by pulling the guy''s necktie and start beating his chest with a cane...'
+							'"I-I''m sorry... I''ll do better..." the man pleads with her...'
+							'"All I hear are promises... Is that all I get to hear from you?"'
+							'"What the fuck is going here?" you quietly mumble. Anna continues on by pulling the guy''s necktie and starts beating his chest with a cane...'
 							'"I-I''m sorry Mis..." the man gets interrupted by the slaps.'
 							'"You didn''t do your homework... again! How do you expect to improve your grades? Do you think your sweet smile is enough? Pull down your boxers and assume the position! Now!" she shouts.'
 						else
 							'You are having a hard time processing what is happening as the brunette suddenly slaps his face few times, "You have been behaving really bad... really really bad."'
-							'"I-I''m sorry... I''ll do better..." the man tries to plead with Anna...'
-							'"All I hear are promises... Is all that I get to hear from you?"'
-							'"What the fuck is going here?" you quietly mumble. The woman continues on by pulling the guy''s necktie and start beating his chest with a cane...'
+							'"I-I''m sorry... I''ll do better..." the man pleads with her...'
+							'"All I hear are promises... Is that all I get to hear from you?"'
+							'"What the fuck is going here?" you quietly mumble. The woman continues on by pulling the guy''s necktie and starts beating his chest with a cane...'
 							'"I-I''m sorry Mis..." the man gets interrupted by the slaps.'
 							'"You didn''t do your homework... again! How do you expect to improve your grades? Do you think your sweet smile is enough? Pull down your boxers and assume the position! Now!" she shouts.'
 						end
@@ -980,13 +980,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/15.jpg"></center>'
 							if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-								'The young man pull down his boxers and steps into the middle of the room. In the meantime Anna starts to undress herself, and in no time she''s in her underwear. Before you know it, she starts to spank his butt with two paddles.'
-								'Despite the beating the guy stays in his place... his ass is getting red as a lobster, but he isn''t trying to escape the punishment.'
-								'"Say you like it... say you did it on purpose." Before he''s able to answer she continues to beat him. Satisfied with her work she commands him to lay on the table, then she approach the table and starts binding him.'
+								'The young man pulls down his boxers and steps into the middle of the room. In the meantime, Anna starts to undress herself, and in no time she''s in her underwear. Before you know it, she starts to spank his butt with two paddles.'
+								'Despite the beating the guy stays in his place... His ass is getting red as a lobster, but he isn''t trying to escape the punishment.'
+								'"Say you like it... say you did it on purpose." Before he''s able to answer, she continues to beat him. Satisfied with her work, she commands him to lay on the table, then she approaches the table and starts binding him.'
 							else
-								'The young man pull down his boxers and steps into the middle of the room. In the meantime the brunette starts to undress herself, and in no time she''s in her underwear. Before you know it, she starts to spank his butt with two paddles.'
-								'Despite the beating the guy stays in his place... his ass is getting red as a lobster, but he isn''t trying to escape the punishment.'
-								'"Say you like it... say you did it on purpose." Before he''s able to answer she continues to beat him. Satisfied with her work she commands him to lay on the table, then she approach the table and starts binding him.'end
+								'The young man pulls down his boxers and steps into the middle of the room. In the meantime, the brunette starts to undress herself, and in no time she''s in her underwear. Before you know it, she starts to spank his butt with two paddles.'
+								'Despite the beating the guy stays in his place... His ass is getting red as a lobster, but he isn''t trying to escape the punishment.'
+								'"Say you like it... say you did it on purpose." Before he''s able to answer, she continues to beat him. Satisfied with her work, she commands him to lay on the table, then she approaches the table and starts binding him.'
+							end
 							gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
 							gs 'stat'
 
@@ -994,21 +995,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/16.jpg"></center>'
 								if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-									'Anna takes a seat on a chair and all of a sudden pulls out a strap-on from the dresser and puts it on. She start to tap the man chest again, while she starts playing around with a vibrator.'
-									'"We''ll see if you didn''t do it on purpose." she sternly looks at him.'
+									'Anna takes a seat on a chair and all of a sudden pulls out a strap-on from the dresser and puts it on. She starts to tap the man''s chest again while she starts playing around with a vibrator.'
+									'"We''ll see if you didn''t do it on purpose." she sternly looks at him sternly.'
 									'"Y-yes Mistress..." he mumbles as he knows what is about to happen...'
-									'"Yes what?" she annoyingly yells back.'
+									'"Yes what?" she yells back annoyed.'
 									'"N-no Mistress... I''m sorry Mistress... I-I mean thank you Mistress..." the man struggles to find the correct words...'
 									'Hearing this Anna spits a little on the tip of the strap-on, and with a big grin on her face, "Bad news... no lube for bad behaving slaves..."'
-									'You cannot believe what you are seeing... You are not ready to see this time and you decide to leave although something in you wants to stay to see what happens to bad slaves...'
+									'You cannot believe what you are seeing... You are not ready to see this this time, and you decide to leave, although something in you wants to stay to see what happens to bad slaves...'
 								else
-									'The woman takes a seat on a chair and all of a sudden pulls out a strap-on from the dresser and puts it on. She start to tap the man chest again, while she starts playing around with a vibrator.'
-									'"We''ll see if you didn''t do it on purpose." she sternly looks at him.'
+									'The woman takes a seat on a chair and all of a sudden pulls out a strap-on from the dresser and puts it on. She starts to tap the man''s chest again while she starts playing around with a vibrator.'
+									'"We''ll see if you didn''t do it on purpose." she looks at him sternly.'
 									'"Y-yes Mistress..." he mumbles as he knows what is about to happen...'
-									'"Yes what?" she annoyingly yells back.'
+									'"Yes what?" she yells back annoyed.'
 									'"N-no Mistress... I''m sorry Mistress... I-I mean thank you Mistress..." the man struggles to find the correct words...'
 									'Hearing this she spits a little on the tip of the strap-on, and with a big grin on her face, "Bad news... no lube for bad behaving slaves..."'
-									'You cannot believe what you are seeing... You are not ready to see this time and you decide to leave although something in you wants to stay to see what happens to bad slaves...'
+									'You cannot believe what you are seeing... You are not ready to see this this time, and you decide to leave, although something in you wants to stay to see what happens to bad slaves...'
 								end
 								gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -1020,10 +1021,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 					end
 				elseif IgorevnaBDSM = 4:					
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/17.jpg"></center>'
-					'Last time you have passed this door, things turned to something rather unexpected. As you pass by you are hoping to catch something new happening as you''re intrigued to what is happening.'
-					'As you approach the door you hear two woman chatting, "Maybe she has a twin sister that looks as her but has a completely different personality."'
-					'Intrigued, you slightly open the door as you hear someone yell out, "Roll!"'
-					'On the floor you can see two bound woman while a woman is wearing some kind of mask and a collar is dressed in regular clothes, it seems she''s executing the order and rolling on the floor...'
+					'Last time you have passed this door, things turned to something rather unexpected. As you pass by you are hoping to catch something new, as you''re intrigued by what is happening.'
+					'As you approach the door, you hear two women chatting, "Maybe she has a twin sister that looks like her, but has a completely different personality."'
+					'Intrigued, you open the door slightly as you hear someone yell out, "Roll!"'
+					'On the floor you can see two bound women, one of whom is wearing some kind of mask and a collar and is dressed in regular clothes. It seems she''s been given the order and is now rolling on the floor...'
 					
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -1033,21 +1034,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 						IgorevnaBDSM += 1
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/18.jpg"></center>'
 						if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-							'"See... I told you, she obey''s to whatever you command her." a woman you''ve never seen before says.'
+							'"See... I told you, she obey''s whatever you command." says a woman you''ve never seen before.'
 							'"You''re right..." you hear another voice, a familiar one, "Take care of our guest!"' 
-							'The gagged girl obediently follows the command. She crawls toward the other girl and start caressing her. You finally get a clear view that it''s Anna that''s handing out the commands.'
-							'The unknown woman speaks up, "I''m not saying you aren''t good in what you do, I''m only saying there''s no need to switch back and forth all the time. I''m not saying it''s wrong; but it is a bit odd. I think that once you have made your decision you shouldn''t be able to turn back when you want."'
-							'The woman continues on, "Don''t take it the wrong way, we''ve known each other for a long time and you have never disappointed me... but let me say one thing, you are strange... but at the same time exceptional..."'
-							'Anna, looking a bit disappointed, "I''ll take it as a compliment El..." It seems the two woman know each other since their youth.'
-							'The girls on the floor continue with their duties but before you can get into it you get interrupted as the unknown woman packs her stuff and gets ready to leave...'
+							'The gagged girl obediently follows the command. She crawls toward the other girl and starts caressing her. You finally get a clear view and see that Anna was the one giving out the commands.'
+							'The unknown woman speaks up, "I''m not saying you aren''t good at what you do, I''m only saying there''s no need to switch back and forth all the time. I''m not saying it''s wrong; but it is a bit odd. I think that once you have made your decision you shouldn''t be able to turn back whenever you want."'
+							'The woman continues on, "Don''t take it the wrong way, we''ve known each other for a long time, and you have never disappointed me... but let me say one thing, you are strange... but at the same time exceptional..."'
+							'Anna, looking a bit disappointed, "I''ll take it as a compliment El..." It seems the two women have known each other since their youth.'
+							'The girls on the floor continue with their duties, but before you can get into it you get interrupted as the unknown woman packs her stuff and gets ready to leave...'
 						else
-							'"See... I told you, she obey''s to whatever you command her." a woman you''ve never seen before says.'
+							'"See... I told you, she obey''s whatever you command." says a woman you''ve never seen before.'
 							'"You''re right..." you hear another voice, a familiar one, "Take care of our guest!"' 
-							'The gagged girl obediently follows the command. She crawls toward the other girl and start caressing her. You finally get a clear view that it''s the brunette that''s handing out the commands.'
-							'The unknown woman speaks up, "I''m not saying you aren''t good in what you do, I''m only saying there''s no need to switch back and forth all the time. I''m not saying it''s wrong; but it is a bit odd. I think that once you have made your decision you shouldn''t be able to turn back when you want."'
-							'The woman continues on, "Don''t take it the wrong way, we''ve known each other for a long time and you have never disappointed me... but let me say one thing, you are strange... but at the same time exceptional..."'
-							'The brunette, looking a bit disappointed, "I''ll take it as a compliment El..." It seems the two woman know each other since their youth.'
-							'The girls on the floor continue with their duties but before you can get into it you get interrupted as the unknown woman packs her stuff and gets ready to leave...'
+							'The gagged girl obediently follows the command. She crawls toward the other girl and starts caressing her. You finally get a clear view and see that the brunette was the one giving out the commands.'
+							'The unknown woman speaks up, "I''m not saying you aren''t good at what you do, I''m only saying there''s no need to switch back and forth all the time. I''m not saying it''s wrong; but it is a bit odd. I think that once you have made your decision you shouldn''t be able to turn back whenever you want."'
+							'The woman continues on, "Don''t take it the wrong way, we''ve known each other for a long time, and you have never disappointed me... but let me say one thing, you are strange... but at the same time exceptional..."'
+							'The brunette, looking a bit disappointed, "I''ll take it as a compliment El..." It seems the two women have known each other since their youth.'
+							'The girls on the floor continue with their duties, but before you can get into it you get interrupted as the unknown woman packs her stuff and gets ready to leave...'
 						end
 						!!the unknown woman is Elektra who pass to visit Lariska''s mum...there''s a check to add if Sveta have met Elektra before... 
 						gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
@@ -1057,19 +1058,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/19.jpg"></center>'
 							if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-								'"Well it''s time for me to leave. You know that I cannot leave my place for more than two hours... If Uslada starts wandering around the mansion alone for more than two hours I''ll come back to a hot mess!" both the woman start laughing, then the unknown woman pulls on the leash of one of the girls, "See how easy it is to control..."'
-								'All of sudden the mood swings and the unknown woman become serious, "That''s exactly what lead me to our discussion. How are you able to not become influenced by switching back and forth? I can understand that some people want to switch it up every once in a while. But you, you switch easily as day and night. It''s not so simple and you should know it better than anyone. Be upfront with me, are you sick? Have you started abusing drugs?"'
+								'"Well it''s time for me to leave. You know that I cannot leave my place for more than two hours... If Uslada is left wandering around the mansion alone for more than two hours, I''ll come back to a hot mess!" both the women start laughing, then the unknown woman pulls on the leash of one of the girls, "See how easy it is to control..."'
+								'Suddenly the mood shifts, and the unknown woman becomes serious, "That''s exactly what led me to our discussion. How are you able to not become influenced by switching back and forth? I can understand that some people want to switch it up every once in a while. But you, you switch easily as day and night. It''s not so simple, and you should know it better than anyone. Be upfront with me, are you sick? Have you started abusing drugs?"'
 								'Anna begins to laugh, "Don''t be silly! There''s nothing wrong, I just let the weather influence me." she teasingly sticks out her tongue.'
-								'The unknown woman shrugs her shoulders, "If you say so, but I really have to go now, let me know when you are in that mood so we can spend some "good" time together."'
-								'Anna cockily replies back with, "You should try it some time, who knows you might like it."'
-								'The unknown woman approaches the door as you quickly move away and stand in front of a different door, not to be seen. Luckily you notice that she didn''t close the door completely and curiously return back...'
+								'The unknown woman shrugs her shoulders, "If you say so, but I really have to go now. Let me know when you are in that mood so we can spend some "good" time together."'
+								'Anna cockily replies back with, "You should try it some time. Who knows, you might like it."'
+								'The unknown woman approaches the door as you quickly move away to stand in front of a different door to avoid being seen. Luckily you notice that she didn''t close the door completely and curiously move back...'
 							else
-								'"Well it''s time for me to leave. You know that I cannot leave my place for more than two hours... If Uslada starts wandering around the mansion alone for more than two hours I''ll come back to a hot mess!" both the woman start laughing, then the unknown woman pulls on the leash of one of the girls, "See how easy it is to control..."'
-								'All of sudden the mood swings and the unknown woman become serious, "That''s exactly what lead me to our discussion. How are you able to not become influenced by switching back and forth? I can understand that some people want to switch it up every once in a while. But you, you switch easily as day and night. It''s not so simple and you should know it better than anyone. Be upfront with me, are you sick? Have you started abusing drugs?"'
+								'"Well it''s time for me to leave. You know that I cannot leave my place for more than two hours... If Uslada is left wandering around the mansion alone for more than two hours, I''ll come back to a hot mess!" both the women start laughing, then the unknown woman pulls on the leash of one of the girls, "See how easy it is to control..."'
+								'Suddenly the mood shifts, and the unknown woman becomes serious, "That''s exactly what led me to our discussion. How are you able to not become influenced by switching back and forth? I can understand that some people want to switch it up every once in a while. But you, you switch easily as day and night. It''s not so simple, and you should know it better than anyone. Be upfront with me, are you sick? Have you started abusing drugs?"'
 								'The brunette begins to laugh, "Don''t be silly! There''s nothing wrong, I just let the weather influence me." she teasingly sticks out her tongue.'
-								'The unknown woman shrugs her shoulders, "If you say so, but I really have to go now, let me know when you are in that mood so we can spend some "good" time together."'
-								'The brunette cockily replies back with, "You should try it some time, who knows you might like it."'
-								'The unknown woman approaches the door as you quickly move away and stand in front of a different door, not to be seen. Luckily you notice that she didn''t close the door completely and curiously return back...'
+								'The unknown woman shrugs her shoulders, "If you say so, but I really have to go now. Let me know when you are in that mood so we can spend some "good" time together."'
+								'The brunette cockily replies back with, "You should try it some time. Who knows, you might like it."'
+								'The unknown woman approaches the door as you quickly move away to stand in front of a different door to avoid being seen. Luckily you notice that she didn''t close the door completely and curiously move back...'
 							end
 							gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 3
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -1078,10 +1079,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/20.jpg"></center>'
 								if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-									'You turn around and go back. Anna is sitting in the chair as she''s slapping the girl''s butt, "You are a good girl you know? I''m in a good mood today so I''ll let you choose, pain or pleasure? But before that I think we should say hello to our guest, don''t you agree?"'
+									'You turn around and go back. Anna is sitting in the chair, and she''s slapping the girl''s butt, "You are a good girl you know? I''m in a good mood today so I''ll let you choose, pain or pleasure? But before that I think we should say hello to our guest, don''t you agree?"'
 									'Caught, you start to panic as Anna pushes away the girl and starts walking toward the door...'
 								else
-									'You turn around and go back. The brunette is sitting in the chair as she''s slapping the girl''s butt, "You are a good girl you know? I''m in a good mood today so I''ll let you choose, pain or pleasure? But before that I think we should say hello to our guest, don''t you agree?"'
+									'You turn around and go back. The brunette is sitting in the chair, and she''s slapping the girl''s butt, "You are a good girl you know? I''m in a good mood today so I''ll let you choose, pain or pleasure? But before that I think we should say hello to our guest, don''t you agree?"'
 									'Caught, you start to panic as she pushes away the girl and starts walking toward the door...'
 								end
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -1091,20 +1092,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maid':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/Anna/peeping/a.jpg"></center>'
 									if lariskaMotherKnown = 1:
-										'You weren''t fast enough, "Got you <<pcs_nickname>>!" You are quite embarrassed, as you were found out, "Did you like the show?" Anna asks.'
-										'Not able to say anything to your defense, and being afraid she might get you fired, you remain silent.'
+										'You weren''t fast enough, "Got you, <<pcs_nickname>>!" You are quite embarrassed, as you were found out, "Did you like the show?" Anna asks.'
+										'Not able to say anything to your defense and being afraid she might get you fired, you remain silent.'
 										'"Come on, cheer up, I''m not angry. I know you have been spying on me for some time" Anna smiles.'
 										'You quickly try to come up with an excuse, "I-I..." you stammer.'
-										'Anna looks at you, "I see. You are worried about your work. Don''t worry I won''t tattle on you. Let us agree on something, if you want to talk come and visit me in this room, at 20:00."'
-										'You quickly nod not wanting to push your luck. "I''m sure we''ll have a lot to discuss. As you may have noticed I need to head back to business. Feel free to visit whenever you want, I''ll be here. Now, if you excuse me..." she closes the door and locks it.'
+										'Anna looks at you, "I see. You are worried about your work. Don''t worry I won''t tattletale on you. Let us agree on something, if you want to talk, come and visit me in this room, at 20:00."'
+										'You quickly nod not wanting to push your luck. "I''m sure we''ll have a lot to discuss. As you may have noticed I need to head back to business. Feel free to visit whenever you want, I''ll be here. Now, if you''ll excuse me..." she closes the door and locks it.'
 										'You are not sure what to make of it, you can visit her whenever you want. But does she have any ulterior motives...'
 									else
 										'You weren''t fast enough, "Got you!" You are quite embarrassed, as you were found out, "Did you like the show?" the brunette asks.'
-										'Not able to say anything to your defense, and being afraid she might get you fired, you remain silent.'
+										'Not able to say anything to your defense and being afraid she might get you fired, you remain silent.'
 										'"Come on, cheer up, I''m not angry. I know you have been spying on me for some time" she smiles.'
 										'You quickly try to come up with an excuse, "I-I..." you stammer.'
-										'The brunette looks at you, "I see. You are worried about your work. Don''t worry I won''t tattle on you. Let us agree on something, if you want to talk come and visit me in this room, at 20:00."'
-										'You quickly nod not wanting to push your luck. "I''m sure we''ll have a lot to discuss. As you may have noticed I need to head back to business. Feel free to visit whenever you want, I''ll be here. Now, if you excuse me..." she closes the door and locks it.'
+										'The brunette looks at you, "I see. You are worried about your work. Don''t worry I won''t tattletale on you. Let us agree on something, if you want to talk, come and visit me in this room, at 20:00."'
+										'You quickly nod not wanting to push your luck. "I''m sure we''ll have a lot to discuss. As you may have noticed I need to head back to business. Feel free to visit whenever you want, I''ll be here. Now, if you''ll excuse me..." she closes the door and locks it.'
 										'You are not sure what to make of it, you can visit her whenever you want. But does she have any ulterior motives...'
 									end	
 									gs 'stat'