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[text edit] clean up sergeihunter

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      locations/sergeihunter.qsrc

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locations/sergeihunter.qsrc

@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 	if huntersSergeiLove > 0 and pcs_horny <= 60 and huntersSergeisex = 0  and rand(0,2) = 0:
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterlove1.4.jpg"></center>'
-		'You went to Sergei to spend time together, but instead he kisses you and playfully bites on your lip.'
+		'You go to Sergei to spend time together, but instead, he kisses you and playfully bites on your lip.'
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want you," he whispers after the kiss.'
 		huntersSergeisex += rand(9,30)
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
@@ -38,9 +38,9 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Sergei</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big174.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'Sergei is a friend of Andrei and Igor, and a member of the group of hunters that frequent the woods and swamp by Gadukino. He''s <<boyage>> years old. He is married and lives in the City Center...'
+		'Sergei is a friend of Andrei and Igor, and a member of the group of hunters that frequents the woods and swamp by Gadukino. He''s <<boyage>> years old. He is married and lives in the City Center...'
 		if huntersSergeiQw < 0:
-			'You and him have a bad relationship, because you offended him in the past.'
+			'You and him have a bad relationship because you offended him in the past.'
 		elseif huntersSergeiQw < 10:
 			'You have a normal relationship with him.'
 		elseif huntersSergeiQw < 20:
@@ -60,7 +60,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/talk1.'+rand(1,3)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			if huntersSergeiQw >= 0:'You spend some time chatting with Sergei, listening to interesting stories from his life and telling some stories of your own.'
-			if huntersSergeiQw < 0:'You talk with Sergei. He seems uncomfortable, but doesn''t force you away.'
+			if huntersSergeiQw < 0:'You talk with Sergei. He seems uncomfortable but doesn''t force you away.'
 			minut += 30
 			if huntersSergeiQw < 10:huntersSergeiQw += 1
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 				act 'Flirt':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterflirt1.'+rand(1,3)+'.jpg"></center>'
-					*nl 'You flirt playfully with Sergei. He is glad for your company, though he can'' stop himself from letting his eyes wander.'
+					*nl 'You flirt playfully with Sergei. He is glad for your company, though he can''t stop himself from letting his eyes wander.'
 					minut += 5
 					!!not using arousal as no orgasm chance
 					pcs_horny += 10
@@ -84,17 +84,17 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 
 
 					if huntersSergeiQw >= 30 and huntersKnowSlut = 0 and pcs_apprnc >= 60:
-						act 'Continue Flirt':
+						act 'Continue flirting':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss1.jpg"></center>'
-							*nl 'Suddenly he cups your chin in his hand and gives you a kiss full of passion.'
+							*nl 'Suddenly, he cups your chin in his hand and gives you a kiss full of passion.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 							gs 'stat'
 
 							act 'Answer kiss':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss2.jpg"></center>'
-								*nl 'You''ve been waiting for this and respond just as passionately. Sergei keeps kissing you and you are right there with him, returning every kiss.'
+								*nl 'You''ve been waiting for this and respond just as passionately. Sergei keeps kissing you, and you are right there with him, returning every kiss.'
 								huntersSergeiLove = 1
 								huntersSergeiQw += 1
 								pcs_mood = 100
@@ -105,7 +105,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 									act'Further':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss3.jpg"></center>'
-										*nl '"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want to make love to you," he says, when he finally pulls back. You answer Sergei with a kiss every bit as passionate as the one that started this. You begin to make your way back towards his room as you do so.'
+										*nl '"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want to make love to you," he says when he finally pulls back. You answer Sergei with a kiss every bit as passionate as the one that started this. You begin to make your way back towards his room as you do so.'
 										minut += 5
 										gs 'stat'
 
@@ -115,7 +115,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 									act'Continue':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss3.jpg"></center>'
-										*nl '"That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>," Sergei said, when your lips finally parted. You see a look that clearly shows he wishes for more and smile.'
+										*nl '"That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>," Sergei says when your lips finally part. You see a look that clearly shows he wishes for more and smile.'
 										minut += 5
 										gs 'stat'
 
@@ -126,7 +126,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 							act 'Move away':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/speak_to_the_hand.jpg"></center>'
-								*nl '"Sorry, Sergei, but this isn''t what I wanted", you say. He leaves with an angry look on his face.'
+								*nl '"Sorry, Sergei, but this isn''t what I wanted," you say. He leaves with an angry look on his face.'
 								minut += 5
 								huntersSergeiQw -= 50
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -170,7 +170,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 					act 'Break up with Sergei':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/brosila.jpg"></center>'
-						*nl '"Sergei the passion is gone", you say, "I think it''s time we parted." You leave without looking back.'
+						*nl '"Sergei, the passion is gone," you say, "I think it''s time we parted." You leave without looking back.'
 						minut += 5
 						huntersSergeiLove = 0
 						huntersSergeiQw -= 100
@@ -188,9 +188,9 @@ else
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/brosil.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You wanted to talk to Sergei, but he beat you to it, and started speaking before you could get a word in.'
-		'<<$pcs_nickname>>, I realized that our relationship had no future, and we need to stop seeing each other, " he said, and trying not to look in your direction, resolutely walked away.'
-		'"Well, maybe it''s for the best, " you think, as you leave in the other direction.'
+		'You want to talk to Sergei, but he beats you to it and starts speaking before you can get a word in.'
+		'<<$pcs_nickname>>, I realized that our relationship has no future and we need to stop seeing each other, " he says and, trying not to look in your direction, resolutely walks away.'
+		'"Well, maybe it''s for the best," you think as you leave in the other direction.'
 		minut += 5
 		huntersSergeiLove = 0
 		huntersSergeiQw -= 10
@@ -201,9 +201,9 @@ else
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/brosil.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You wanted to talk to Sergei, but before you say anything he speaks instead.'
-		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I realized that our relationship has no future. You''re passion is unmatched, but I really love my family. I can''t risk that for you, " he says. He turns and walks away without saying another word, nor giving you time to say anything.'
-		'"Well, that''s how you feel is it?" you think as you stand there stunned. "Although this is probably for the best since he was married." you conclude before walking away.'
+		'You want to talk to Sergei, but before you say anything, he speaks instead.'
+		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I realized that our relationship has no future. Your passion is unmatched, but I really love my family. I can''t risk that for you," he says. He turns and walks away without saying another word nor giving you time to say anything.'
+		'"Well, that''s how you feel is it?" you think as you stand there stunned. "Although, this is probably for the best since he is married," you conclude before walking away.'
 		minut += 5
 		huntersSergeiLove = 0
 		huntersSergeiQw -= 50