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  1. 11 13
      locations/albinahome.qsrc
  2. 6 6
      locations/begin.qsrc
  3. 1 1
      locations/journal.qsrc
  4. 49 47
      locations/preSYS.qsrc

+ 11 - 13
locations/albinahome.qsrc

@@ -13,18 +13,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	''
 	if AlbinaQW['albride'] = 1:
 		AlbinaQW['albride'] = 2
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-		''
-		'Albina takes you to her room and you sit down together.'
-		'Albina''s mother pops her head in, telling you that she heading out to do some errands and voicing her worry. Albina reassures her, saying that she has you for company as she walks her mother to the door.'
-		'Albina turns back to you and smiles affably. "<<$pcs_firstname>>! I have a bottle of fine wine for us to drink!"'
+		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinahome1.jpg"></center>'
+		'Albina leads you to the sitting room and disappears into the kitchen. While she is gone, her phone vibrates on the table. You look and see that "Mother" is trying to call her. "Strange. She''s never mentioned her mother." you think to yourself.'
+		'The phone rings out as Albina returns with a bottle of wine and two glasses. She places them on the table and notices her missed call. She frantically picks her phone up and types a message before stuffing it in her pocket, giving you a weak smile. "Don''t worry about who that was <<$pcs_firstname>>. I have a bottle of fine wine for us to drink!"'
 		act 'Drink':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'wine'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinahome1.jpg"></center>'
-			'Albina directs you to take a seat in the sitting room. She returns with a bottle of wine and two glasses. She pours wine into the glasses and hands you one, sitting down next to you.'
+			'She pours wine into the glasses and hands you one, sitting down next to you.'
 			'You drink together with Albina. A smile beams across her face. "He''s gone! He''s finally gone!"'
 			'She swiftly drinks all of her wine. "He was going down hard. I''ve been gathering evidence for years. All his emails, text messages, phone calls and witnesses all proving what a scumbag he is. I finally gathered enough to take him down!"'
 			act 'Ask how her father reacted':
@@ -37,8 +35,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				'Albina scoffs and tops up her glass with more wine. "Why does it matter? He''s gone and will be gone for a long time."'
 				'"Hate him that much?" you ask as you take a sip from your glass.'
 				'Albina just glares at you. "Let''s just drink." she scorns.'
-				'You sit quietly for a while, sipping your wine while Albina again gulps down the contents of her glass. She sits in silence before suddenly throwing the glass in frustration, shattering it as it hits the wall.'
-				'"My father is a fucking bastard. If there is a hell, there is a special place reserved for him to suffer for what he''s done."'
+				'You sit quietly for a while, sipping your wine while Albina again gulps down the contents of her glass. She sits in silence before suddenly screaming and throwing the glass in frustration, shattering it as it hits the wall.'
+				'"Fucking bastard!! If there is a hell, there is a special place reserved just for you to suffer for what you done you fucking creep!!"'
 				act 'Ask what she''s talking about':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 15
@@ -47,7 +45,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'"What are you talking about?" you ask, startled by her outburst. Albina looks at you meekly as tears well up in her eyes.'
 					'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, my father has raped and abused me from such an early age, I don''t even remember when it all began. I''ve spent my entire life being his plaything." she tearfully admits.'
 					'"When my mother found out, he used his connections to stop her taking me with her when she left him."'
-					'But now that he''s going down, my mother came back here to live with and look after me. Get me counselling if I need it, you know? You have to excuse her caution earlier. She''s on edge about what my father can do, even in prison."'
+					'But now that he''s going down, she came back here to live with and look after me. Get me counselling if I need it, you know? That''s why she''s always checking up on me. She''s on edge about what my father can do, even in prison."'
 					*nl
 					'She continues. "The truth is his political campaign never took off. He loved abusing his position as a cop to bully others, including me, but when he retired, he didn''t have that power anymore. A political career was his chance to get that back."'
 					'"Nobody was willing to back him however." She stops talking for a few seconds and you can clearly see her hands shaking. "That''s when...that''s when he decided to...whore me out to his friends. For ''a bit of fun'' with me, they would ''donate'' to his campaign fund.". She is on the verge of bursting into tears in front of you.'
@@ -532,7 +530,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wear_strapon':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/givevag2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You slap her on the ass. "Come on Albina! Ride it like you mean it." you tell her. With your encouragement, she starts really riding you hard and fast, taking the whole length inside her until several minutes later, she cries out in ecstasy. She slides off the dildo, which glistens with her juices, and collapses on the bed as an intense orgasm rocks her body.'
+			'You slap her on the ass. "Come on Albina! Ride it like you mean it." With your encouragement, she starts really riding you hard and fast, taking the whole length inside her until several minutes later, she cries out in ecstasy. She slides off the dildo, which glistens with her juices, and collapses on the bed as an intense orgasm rocks her body.'
 			'Once her orgasm has passed, she looks at you with an appreciative smile on her face.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap_give', 7, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -551,8 +549,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuck_albina_ass':
 	gs 'boyStat', 'D3'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/giveanal1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You slap her on the ass. "Get up, I''m not finished with you yet." She arches a brow, but does as you command and gets on all fours. You grab the bottle of lube and squirt some onto the dildo, rubbing it up and down the shaft until it is very slick and rub the excess onto her asshole.'
-	'You kneel down behind her and line the head of the dildo up with her asshole and slowly push forward. There is a bit of resistance, but with a little more pressure the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo pops into her ass. She moans in a mixture of pain and pleasure as you start off with slow shallow strokes, but as her groans of pain turn into moans of pleasure, you take deeper and faster strokes. After a few minutes, you pull out of her ass and she looks back over her shoulder, obviously wondering why you stopped.'
+	'Albina then leans over and whispers in your ear. "I want you to fuck my ass <<$pcs_nickname>>..." You grin as she giggles and gets on all fours. You grab the bottle of lube and squirt some onto the dildo, rubbing it up and down the shaft until it is very slick and then rub the excess onto her asshole.'
+	'You kneel down behind her, line the head of the dildo up with her asshole and slowly push forward. There is a bit of resistance, but with a little more pressure the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dildo pops into her ass. She moans in a mixture of pain and pleasure as you start off with slow shallow strokes, but as her groans of pain turn into moans of pleasure, you take deeper and faster strokes. After a few minutes, you pull out of her ass and she looks back over her shoulder, obviously wondering why you stopped.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 5, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Finish': gt 'albinahome', 'strapon_finish'
@@ -560,7 +558,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuck_albina_ass':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/giveanal2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You can tell that she wants you to keep fucking her ass. You slide the dildo back into her hole with ease, making her moan in pleasure. You grab onto her hips and start fucking her balls deep, filling her ass with the entire dildo. After several minutes, you feel her ass tighten around your fake cock and she crys out as her body is rocked by an intense orgasm, her pussy spraying liquid onto the bed. You keep fucking her throughout her orgasm, only pulling out once her shudders have passed.'
+		'"Come on <<$pcs_nickname>>. Put it back in and fuck me....hard." You smile at her words and slide the dildo back into her hole with ease, making her moan in pleasure. You grab onto her hips and start fucking her balls deep, filling her ass with the entire dildo. After several minutes, you feel her ass tighten around your fake cock and she cries out as her body is rocked by an intense orgasm, her pussy spraying liquid onto the bed. You keep fucking her throughout her orgasm, only pulling out once her shudders have passed.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 5, 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Finish': gt 'albinahome', 'strapon_finish'

+ 6 - 6
locations/begin.qsrc

@@ -8,19 +8,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">CHOOSE GAME START</font></b></center>'
 	*nl
 	'<b>Transformation Start:</b>'
-	'You are Mikhail Kuznetsov, a fairly average, 35 year old businessman who finds an artefact that changes everything about him and his life. Features magic.'
+	'You are Mikhail Kuznetsov, a fairly average 35 year old businessman who finds an artifact that changes everything about him and his life. Features magic.'
 	*nl
 	'<b>Schoolgirl Start:</b>'
-	'You are a schoolgirl in the most lustful town in Russia. Will you study hard and keep your purity for that special someone or become a sex addicted whore? Or anything in between, the possibilities are endless. No magic.'
+	'You are a schoolgirl in the most lustful town in Russia. Will you study hard and keep your purity for that special someone, become a sex addicted whore or anything in between? The possibilities are endless. No magic.'
 	*nl
 	'<b>Cursed Schoolgirl Start:</b>'
-	'Marvel as we recklessly squish both of the above into one start. You are a schoolgirl who finds the amulet and not much changes, except the magic, actually that''s quite a big change.'
+	'Marvel as we recklessly squish both of the above into one start. You are a schoolgirl who finds the amulet and not much changes, except for the magic used.'
 	*nl
 	'<b>Cursed Schoolboy Start:</b>'
-	'You are Peter Ivanov, a fairly average teenage boy who, while trying to escape a bad situation, ends up in the body of a schoolgirl. Now you have to deal with a new body, new desires, and your new life in the most lustful town in Russia. Features magic.'
+	'You are Peter Ivanov, a fairly average teenage boy who, while trying to escape a bad situation, ends up in the body of a schoolgirl. Now you have to deal with a new body, new desires and your new life in the most lustful town in Russia. Features magic.'
 	*nl
 	'<b>New in Town Start:</b>'
-	'You''re controlled by your overbearing mother and can''t take it any more. It is time to find a new life in the city away from her influence. For the first time you can make your own decisions and mistakes. No magic.'
+	'You''re controlled by your overbearing mother and can''t take it any more. It is time to find a new life in the city away from her influence. For the first time, you can make your own decisions and mistakes. No magic.'
 	
 	act '<center><b>Transformation Start</b></center>':
 		settingmode = 0
@@ -93,7 +93,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'real_character':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>CHARACTER SELECTION</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/shared/character_creation.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'This game offers you the ability to create your own character.'
+	'This game offers the ability to create your own character.'
 	'To do this, replace the image "avatar" in the "images" folder of the game with a file of the same name and format JPEG (.jpg). That''s it!'
 	'Please note, this choice can only be changed in the cheat menu and in-game changes to hair color, length etc. will not affect the displayed image if you are using a custom one.'
 	'This function is made solely to simplify things for those that want to use a custom image without having to sort through hundreds of pictures.'

+ 1 - 1
locations/journal.qsrc

@@ -291,7 +291,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'friends_family':
 	'Aunt Lyudmila Knavs - Your aunt Luda works at the pharmacy in Pavlovsk. She is your mothers older sister. She has a live in boyfriend named Olu that she meet while traveling. He is an African man, which causes more than a few rumors and sour looks at your aunt. Your aunt doesn''t seem to care about that, and if anything, seems to enjoy flaunting her boyfriend in front of others.'
 	*nl
 	'<center><img src="images/pc/notebook/55.png"></center>'
-	'Oluuosegun "Olu" Maina - You don''t know much about your aunts live-in boyfriend, only that he doesn''t speak Russian very well and he is from Africa. He''s a very large and muscular man. You know many in the area that find it disgraceful that your aunt lives with him.'
+	'Oluuosegun "Olu" Maina - You don''t know much about your aunt''s live-in boyfriend, only that he is from Africa and doesn''t speak Russian very well. He''s a very large and muscular man. You know many in the area that find it disgraceful that your aunt lives with him.'
 	*nl
 	'<center><img src="images/pc/notebook/31.png"></center>'
 	'Great Grandpa Zlatek Knavs - Your great grandfather is a grumpy old man. He is always complaining about the village elders and how they have neglected the village to the point where it is now barely fit to live in. He can walk, but requires a cane. He doesn''t really leave the house anymore, unless he really has to. Your mother and aunt were raised by your great grandparents.'

+ 49 - 47
locations/preSYS.qsrc

@@ -117,7 +117,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'CSBStart':
 	brothersawpirsF = 0
 	
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/csb/petercsb.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your name is Peter Ivanov. You''ve got blond hair and blue eyes. Your parents died shortly after you were born, and your great uncle Ivan took you in. He works at a construction company out of one of the suburbs of St. Petersburg. He''s a man''s man and has never been very close to you, choosing to let you make your own way as long as it does not embarrass him publicly. You''ve grown to be quite independent, but lack any real defining qualities.'
+	'Your name is Peter Ivanov. You''ve got blond hair and blue eyes. Your parents died shortly after you were born and your great uncle Ivan took you in. He works at a construction company out of one of the suburbs of St. Petersburg. He''s a man''s man and has never been very close to you, choosing to let you make your own way as long as it does not embarrass him publicly. You''ve grown to be quite independent, but lack any real defining qualities.'
 	
 	date_toggle = args[1]
 	if birthday < 10 and birthmonth < 10:
@@ -266,9 +266,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SGStart':
 	gs 'set_home', 2
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your name is <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, Friends and family sometimes call you <<$pcs_nickname>>. Your mother''s name is <<$npc_firstname[''A29'']>>, and your biological father left when you were a baby. Your mother married your stepfather, <<$npc_firstname[''A28'']>>, shortly afterwards. <<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>> is your older sister. She is two years older than you and is still living at home while working at the local grocery store. She chose not to attend college and instead spends most of her free time drinking with her friends or going to parties, much to your mother''s dismay. You also have a younger half-brother, <<$npc_firstname[''A34'']>>, who is really into sports, especially football, and is shaping up to be a fine athlete. He is a year younger than you are, and his father is your stepfather.'
+	'Your name is <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, friends and family often calling you <<$pcs_nickname>>. Your mother''s name is <<$npc_firstname[''A29'']>> and your biological father left when you were a baby. Your mother married your stepfather, <<$npc_firstname[''A28'']>>, shortly afterwards. <<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>> is your older sister. She is two years older than you and is still living at home while working at the local grocery store. She chose not to attend college and instead spends most of her free time drinking with her friends and going to parties, much to your mother''s dismay. You also have a younger half-brother, <<$npc_firstname[''A34'']>>, who is really into sports, especially football, and is shaping up to be a fine athlete. He is a year younger than you and his father is your stepfather.'
 	*nl
-	'Your <<$npc_usedname[''A30'']>> lives in the same building as you do, though you rarely see her except when you pass her in the stairwell. She is your mother''s sister. <<$npc_usedname[''A54'']>>, as everyone calls him, is best friends with your stepfather. <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A11'']>>, your childhood friend, is the same age as you and grew up living in the same apartment building on the floor above yours. His father, <<$npc_firstname[''A112'']>>, is an old friend of your mother''s.'
+	'Your <<$npc_usedname[''A30'']>> lives in the same building as you do, though you rarely see her except when you pass her in the stairwell. She is your mother''s sister. <<$npc_usedname[''A54'']>>, as everyone calls him, is best friends with your stepfather. <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A11'']>>, your childhood friend, is the same age as you and grew up living in the same apartment building on the floor above yours. His father, <<$npc_firstname[''A112'']>>, is an old friend of your mother.'
 
 	act 'Re-enter name/s': gt 'preSYS', 'SGStart'
 	act 'Continue':	gt 'preSYS', 'SGStart2'
@@ -343,7 +343,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SGStart3':
 	*nl
 	'You can choose from two starting locations:'
 	*nl
-	'In the Pavlovsk start you awaken at your parent''s home in the provincial town of Pavlovsk <i>(Recommended for new players)</i>. In the Gadukino start you are visiting your grandparent''s house in the small farming village of Gadukino.'
+	'In the Pavlovsk start, you awaken at your parent''s home in the provincial town of Pavlovsk <i>(Recommended for new players)</i>. In the Gadukino start, you are visiting your grandparent''s house in the small farming village of Gadukino.'
 
 	!gs 'gschool_lessons', 'npc_data'
 
@@ -367,7 +367,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pav_start':
 	'<center><h2>Pavlovsk</h2></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/alt/gorodok.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'<center>A provincial town in a rural area of Russia, it looks much like all the other towns in the region. Population: about 15000 inhabitants.</center>'
+	'<center>A provincial town in a rural area of Russia, it looks much like all the other towns in the region. Population: about 15,000 inhabitants.</center>'
 	start_location = 1
 	act 'Confirm location': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Change location': gt 'preSYS', 'SGStart3'
@@ -387,36 +387,36 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'charselect':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart27.jpg"></center>'
-	'Select your personality/social group. Your social group will have a major defining impact upon your life in school, and will determine your starting friends, starting traits, and overall look. While you can always change groups later on, it takes time and effort, so choose wisely. Your five choices of social group are.'
+	'Select your personality/social group. Your social group will have a major defining impact upon your life in school and will determine your starting friends, starting traits and overall look. While you can always change groups later on, it takes time and effort, so choose wisely. Your five choices of social group are.'
 	*nl
-	'Nerds, geeks, and good students. - These students tend to do well in school and are well-liked by teachers and other adults, and your parents will also be more proud of you. They tend to not have many friends outside of the geeks and nerds social group, however, and are also sometimes picked on or bullied. They are subpar athletically and place less value on looks and social skills than other cliques.'
+	'Nerds, geeks and good students. - These students tend to do well in school and are well liked by teachers and other adults and your parents will also be more proud of you. They tend to not have many friends outside of their own social group, however, and are also sometimes picked on or bullied. They are subpar athletically and place less value on looks and social skills than other cliques.'
 	*nl
 	'Jocks and natural athletes. - These students are gifted in their chosen sport and are very athletically inclined. This means that they tend to be fit and in good shape, often making them better looking than many of the other students. They get along with other jocks and are respected by the cool kids of the school while being feared by the nerds, geeks and losers. They don''t value academic achievements and can come into conflict with the gopniks and other troublemakers.'
 	*nl
-	'The popular, cool, and beautiful. - These students are typically socially-gifted and are often blessed with natural good looks. They are envied by many because of this, and most other kids want to be their friends. More than any of the other cliques, they have the ability to ruin someone''s reputation and make them social outcasts, which makes them respected and feared by many students. Being cool and good looking is all they value, so they tend to be subpar athletically and academically.'
+	'The popular, cool and beautiful. - These students are typically socially-gifted and are often blessed with natural good looks. They are envied by many because of this, and most other kids want to be their friends. More than any of the other cliques, they have the ability to ruin someone''s reputation and make them social outcasts, which earns them the fear of many students. Being cool and good looking is all they value, so they tend to be subpar athletically and academically.'
 	*nl
-	'Gopniks, rebels, punks, or troublemakers. - These students don''t play by the rules and, in fact, will often happily piss on them if given half a chance. They are in decent shape from all of their fighting and troublemaking, but their predilection for drinking, smoking and drugs often counteracts this to a point. They are not the most well-liked students; teachers and parents alike take a dim view of them, as does the local police. Most other students fear them, either from the years of bullying or from the gopniks'' willingness to fight. Some students secretly envy their carefree attitude and apparent ability to sneer and wave off many of the social pitfalls that other students face.'
+	'Gopniks, rebels, punks and troublemakers. - These students don''t play by the rules and, in fact, will often happily piss on them if given half a chance. They are in decent shape from all of their fighting and troublemaking, but their predilection for drinking, smoking and drugs often counteracts this to a point. They are not the most well-liked students; teachers and parents alike take a dim view of them, as does the local police. Most other students fear them, either from the years of bullying or from the gopniks'' willingness to fight. Some students secretly envy their carefree attitude and apparent ability to sneer and wave off many of the social pitfalls that other students face.'
 	*nl
-	'Losers, teachers'' pets, sluts, and the ugly. - These students are the outcasts - the kids no one likes to spend time with, other than to pick on them or bully them. Perhaps they are just socially awkward and never made many friends, broke one of the unwritten social school rules, or are ugly, a tattle tell, a slut, and/or an outed gay boy. Either way, they all have one thing in common: they are easy targets to bully and mock.'
+	'Losers, teachers'' pets, sluts and the ugly. - These students are the outcasts - the kids no one likes to spend time with, other than to pick on or bully them. Perhaps they are just socially awkward and never made many friends, broke one of the unwritten social school rules, are ugly, a snitch, a slut and/or an outed gay boy. Either way, they all have one thing in common: they are easy targets to bully and mock.'
 
 	act 'Full custom setup': gt 'preSYS2', 'start'
 
 	act 'Nerd, Geek, Student':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'preSYS', 'nerdinfo'
-		act 'I am the queen of the nerds!': gt 'preSYS', 'nerdqueen'
+		act 'I am the Queen of the Nerds!': gt 'preSYS', 'nerdqueen'
 		act 'I am a good student': gt 'preSYS', 'goodstudent'
 		act 'I am a computer geek': gt 'preSYS', 'computergeek'
-		act 'I am an avid Chess player': gt 'preSYS', 'chessplayer'
+		act 'I am an avid chess player': gt 'preSYS', 'chessplayer'
 			
 	end
 
 	act 'Athlete, Jock':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'preSYS', 'jockinfo'
-		act 'Avid volleyball player!': gt 'preSYS', 'volleyball'
-		act 'Avid dancer!': gt 'preSYS', 'dancer'
-		act 'Avid runner!': gt 'preSYS', 'runner'
+		act 'Avid volleyball player': gt 'preSYS', 'volleyball'
+		act 'Avid dancer': gt 'preSYS', 'dancer'
+		act 'Avid runner': gt 'preSYS', 'runner'
 		act 'Avid football player.': gt 'preSYS', 'football'
 	end
 
@@ -424,19 +424,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'charselect':
 !!if we can do school uniforms gets an appropriate or borderline uniform.
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'preSYS', 'popularinfo'
-		act 'I have a lot of friends!': gt 'preSYS', 'socialite'
+		act 'I have a lot of friends': gt 'preSYS', 'socialite'
 		act 'I am beautiful': gt 'preSYS', 'beautiful'
 	end
 
 	act 'Gopnik, Rebel, Punk, Troublemaker':
 !!If you can do uniforms then they can choose inappropriate or borderline
-!!can pick 1-3 tattoo''s at start
+!!can pick 1-3 tattoos at start
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'preSYS', 'gopnikinfo'
-		act 'A Gopnik': gt 'preSYS', 'gopnikstart'
-		act 'A Punk or Troublemaker!': gt 'preSYS', 'troublemaker'
-		act '<<$npc_nickname[''A9'']>>''s Girl Friend':  gt 'preSYS', 'vitekgf'
-		act 'An Alternative, Party Girl, or Rebel': gt 'preSYS', 'alternative'
+		act 'A gopnik': gt 'preSYS', 'gopnikstart'
+		act 'A punk or troublemaker': gt 'preSYS', 'troublemaker'
+		act '<<$npc_nickname[''A9'']>>''s girlfriend':  gt 'preSYS', 'vitekgf'
+		act 'An alternative, party girl or rebel': gt 'preSYS', 'alternative'
 	end
 
 	act 'Outcast, Loser, Goth, Ugly':
@@ -444,9 +444,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'charselect':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'outcastinfo'
 		act 'I have no friends': gt 'preSYS', 'friendless'
 		act 'I am an ugly duckling': gt 'preSYS', 'uglyduckling'
-		act 'I am a Good girl': gt 'preSYS', 'goodgirl'
+		act 'I am a good girl': gt 'preSYS', 'goodgirl'
 		act 'I am a slut': gt 'preSYS', 'slut'
-		act 'I am the resident Goth': gt 'preSYS', 'goth'
+		act 'I am the resident goth': gt 'preSYS', 'goth'
 	end
 	
 	act 'Random personality':
@@ -537,16 +537,16 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'nerdinfo':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Nerd</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart3.jpg"></center>'
-	'While you were growing up, you spent virtually all of your free time at home, pursuing various cerebral pursuits. These might have included reading comics, fantasy or sci-fi books, learning about chess or computers, or playing cards, board games, or RPGs with the other nerds in addition to faithfully going to school. While you have gained a huge amount of knowledge from this, your lack of interest in exercising as a child has left your body a little frail.'
+	'While you were growing up, you spent virtually all of your free time at home, pursuing various cerebral pursuits. These might have included reading comics, fantasy or sci-fi books, learning about chess or computers or playing cards, board games, or RPGs with the other nerds in addition to faithfully going to school. While you have gained a huge amount of knowledge from this, your lack of interest in exercising as a child has left your body a little frail.'
 	*nl
-	'The long nights of trying to read in poor light have taken a toll on your eyesight as well, and you now need glasses to be able to read. Your cerebral pursuits have also had somewhat of a negative impact on your friendship with <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>>: as you grew up, he became a gopnik and the two of you slowly started hanging out less and less, although you still consider each other to be friends. On the plus side, doing well in school has made your parents happy and has left you with some extra spending money as a reward for your hard work. Now...'
+	'The long nights of trying to read in poor light have taken a toll on your eyesight as well, and you now need glasses to be able to read. Your cerebral pursuits have also had somewhat of a negative impact on your friendship with <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>>: as you grew up. He became a gopnik and the two of you slowly started hanging out less and less, although you still consider each other to be friends. On the plus side, doing well in school has made your parents happy and has left you with some extra spending money as a reward for your hard work. Now...'
 	*nl
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'jockinfo':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Jock</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart4.jpg"></center>'
-	'While you were growing up, you spent virtually all of your free time outdoors. You loved playing sports, running, biking, horseback riding, hiking, and most other outdoor activities. This has kept you in fairly good shape as well as decently socially active in a variety of team sports over the years. Doing this, however, negatively impacted your friendship with <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>> somewhat. As you grew up, he became a gopnik and the two of you slowly started hanging out less and less, though you still consider each other to be friends. From all the sports available, you are a...'
+	'While you were growing up, you spent virtually all of your free time outdoors. You loved playing sports, running, biking, horseback riding, hiking and most other outdoor activities. This has kept you in fairly good shape as well as decently socially active in a variety of team sports over the years. Doing this, however, negatively impacted your friendship with <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>> somewhat. As you grew up, he became a gopnik and the two of you slowly started hanging out less and less, though you still consider each other to be friends. From all the sports available, you are an...'
 	*nl
 end
 
@@ -607,7 +607,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'nerdqueen':
 	!!above average looks and average physically fit
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Queen of the nerds</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart8.jpg"></center>'
-	'While you love all things nerdy or geeky, what you love the most is hanging out with your fellow nerds and doing nerdy things together. This has made you fairly social for a nerd and more general in your areas of knowledge. As you got older and started to develop as a girl, it also made you much more aware of your sexuality than most nerds are comfortable with. As such, you cultivated that awareness more than most and are now more at ease with your body than most of the other nerds. By the usual nerd standards you are confident, dynamic, and attractive. This has lead to you being the leader of your group of friends, and you are more acceptable to other social groups as a result, especially the cool kids who seem to respect your social skills and looks.'
+	'While you love all things nerdy or geeky, what you love the most is hanging out with your fellow nerds and doing nerdy things together. This has made you fairly social for a nerd and more general in your areas of knowledge. As you got older and started to develop as a girl, it also made you much more aware of your sexuality than most nerds are comfortable with. As such, you cultivated that awareness more than most and are now more at ease with your body than most of the other nerds. By the usual nerd standards you are confident, dynamic and attractive. This has lead to you being the leader of your group of friends, and you are more acceptable to other social groups as a result, especially the cool kids who seem to respect your social skills and looks.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'nerd'
@@ -676,7 +676,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'computergeek':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Computer geek</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart10.jpg"></center>'
-	'You were always into computers, whether it be by playing video games, taking computers apart, or learning programing and even hacking. You love everything about computers, but this passion left you little time to make friends - real-life friends, at least. You have managed to befriend many online players that you talk to while you play various video games, however, and you rarely spend any time outdoors, nor money on clothes or other girly stuff. You are far more interested in saving your money for a better computer in order to play even better games. You have considered hosting a web series of video games or vlogs - you even took the time to learn how to video edit - but you aren’’t sure if you want to put yourself out there like that.'
+	'You were always into computers, whether it be by playing video games, taking computers apart or learning programing and even hacking. You love everything about computers, but this passion left you little time to make friends - real-life friends, at least. You have managed to befriend many online players that you talk to while you play various video games, however, and you rarely spend any time outdoors, nor money on clothes or other girly stuff. You are far more interested in saving your money for a better computer in order to play even better games. You have considered hosting a web series of video games or vlogs - you even took the time to learn how to video edit - but you aren’’t sure if you want to put yourself out there like that.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'nerd'
@@ -806,7 +806,9 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'dancer':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Avid dancer</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart13.jpg"></center>'
-	'You fell in love with dance at an early age and never looked back. You spent a lot of your free time trying to improve your skills, and it paid off; you''re actually quite good now! <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>> helpfully pointed out that an added benefit of dance was a greater increase in your flexibility (that is, of course, typical of <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>>). Your obsession with dancing, however, has had some repercussions on your school performance. You''re a sub-par student, and you haven''t made many friends other than your fellow jocks and <<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>>, one of the popular girls, who is just as passionate about dance as you are.'
+	'You fell in love with dancing at an early age and never looked back. You spent a lot of your free time trying to improve your skills, and it paid off; you''re actually quite good now! <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>> helpfully pointed out that an added benefit of dance was a greater increase in your flexibility (that is, of course, typical of <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>>). Your obsession with dancing, however, has had some repercussions on your school performance. You''re a sub-par student, and you haven''t made many friends other than your fellow jocks.' 
+	*nl
+	'You are particularly close with <<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>>, who is just as passionate about dancing as you are.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'jock'
@@ -834,7 +836,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dancer':
 		pcs_inhib = 25
 		pcs_makupskl = 35
 		gsAboDance += 30
-		npc_rel['A23'] += 20
+		npc_rel['A23'] += 25
 		grupvalue[1] = 300
 		willpowermax = 140
 		school_clothing = 7
@@ -845,7 +847,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'runner':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Track runner</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart14.jpg"></center>'
-	'Ever since you first tried track, you have been in love with the sport. When you’re running, the rest of the world fades away and you experience a natural high like none other. You spent a lot of your free time trying to get better at it, and it paid off; you''re actually quite good now! Your obsession with running, however, has had some repercussions on your school performance. You''re a sub-par student, and you haven''t made many friends other than your fellow jocks and your coach.'
+	'Ever since you first tried track, you have been in love with the sport. When you’re running, the rest of the world fades away and you experience a natural high like no other. You spent a lot of your free time trying to get better at it, and it paid off; you''re actually quite good now! Your obsession with running, however, has had some repercussions on your school performance. You''re a sub-par student, and you haven''t made many friends other than your fellow jocks and your coach.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'jock'
@@ -934,7 +936,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'socialite':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sociable</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart16.jpg"></center>'
-	'You have a ton of friends! You’’re friends with all of the important kids at school, anyways, which is what really matters. You were very social growing up and enjoyed being around others, often becoming the center of attention. You have always had a knack of knowing the right thing to say at the right moment, which led to many other students wanting to be your friend. You can with a little work get along with nearly anyone if you put your mind to it.'
+	'You have a ton of friends! You''re friends with all of the important kids at school, anyways, which is what really matters. You were very social growing up and enjoyed being around others, often becoming the center of attention. You have always had a knack of knowing the right thing to say at the right moment, which led to many other students wanting to be your friend. You can with a little work get along with nearly anyone if you put your mind to it.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'cool'
@@ -966,7 +968,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'beautiful':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Beautiful</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart17.jpg"></center>'
-	'You might not be the smartest, and you might not be the most social or have the toughest attitude - but what you do have are natural good looks, that’s not something you can earn! You blossomed earlier than most girls and the boys took note, especially <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>>, who started acting differently around you. You know he is attracted to you, but who can blame him? After all, you''re fairly certain that all of the boys (and even some of the girls) lust after you either openly or secretly. As you got older your looks only improved, and you are often considered one of the best-looking girls in the room wherever you go. You are especially popular with the cool kids and jocks.'
+	'You might not be the smartest and you might not be the most social or have the toughest attitude - but what you do have are natural good looks. That’s not something you can earn! You blossomed earlier than most girls and the boys took note, especially <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>>, who started acting differently around you. You know he is attracted to you, but who can blame him? After all, you''re fairly certain that all of the boys (and even some of the girls) lust after you either openly or secretly. As you got older your looks only improved, and you are often considered one of the best looking girls in the room wherever you go. You are especially popular with the cool kids and jocks.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'cool'
@@ -1060,7 +1062,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'gopnikstart':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Gopnik</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart18.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are a gopnik. While you are still low in the gopnik pecking order, you have already proven yourself to them and most fully accept you as equal. Because of your behavior, you have problems at home and school. This is especially true with your mother and stepfather, who see you going down the wrong path. The teachers and the police all know you''re one of the local gopniks. The jocks have a not so friendly rivalry with you and the other gopniks, while you don''t get along much, their is some mutal respect.'
+	'You are a gopnik. While you are still low in the gopnik pecking order, you have already proven yourself to them and most fully accept you as an equal. You have problems at home and school due to your antisocial behavior. This is especially true with your mother and stepfather, who see you going down the wrong path. The teachers and the police all know you''re one of the local gopniks. The jocks have a not so friendly rivalry with you and the other gopniks, while you don''t get along much, have some mutal respect for you.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'gopnik'
@@ -1092,7 +1094,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'troublemaker':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Troublemaker</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart19.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are a troublemaker. Nothing makes you happier than causing problems, whether it be petty larceny, getting into fights, or vandalizing. You live for the thrill of breaking the rules. You get along fairly well with the gopniks and they accept you as a kindred spirit. They seem to love your willingness to jump head first into any and all trouble you run across - and if you can''t find any, you will happily make your own, which keeps things lively. Because of your behavior, you have problems at home and school. This is especially true with your mother and stepfather, who see you going down the wrong path. The teachers and the police all know who you are.'
+	'You are a troublemaker. Nothing makes you happier than causing problems, whether it be petty larceny, getting into fights or vandalism. You live for the thrill of breaking the rules. You get along fairly well with the gopniks and they accept you as a kindred spirit. They seem to love your willingness to jump head first into any and all trouble you run across - and if you can''t find any, you will happily make your own, which keeps things lively. You have problems at home and school due to your antisocial behavior. This is especially true with your mother and stepfather, who see you going down the wrong path. The teachers and the police all know who you are.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		traits['nerd_points'] = -50
@@ -1136,7 +1138,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vitekgf':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Vitek''s girlfriend</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart20.jpg"></center>'
 	'You are <<$npc_nickname[''A9'']>>''s girlfriend. You love the thrill and danger of hanging out with the gopniks, even if you lack the true attitude yourself. You met <<$npc_nickname[''A9'']>> after he and <<$npc_firstname[''A11'']>> became friends. There was something about his bad boy attitude that drew you in, and you soon found yourself falling for him.'
-	'As you developed, he started to take an interest in you as well. Soon thereafter the two of you started dating. You’’re not technically a gopnik - you are considered more of a wanna-be - but the rest of the gopniks seem to accept you anyways. You’’re not sure what would happen if you ever broke up with <<$npc_nickname[''A9'']>>, however, as being his girlfriend and hanging out with the other gopniks has cost you any real, close friends outside of their group.'
+	'As you developed, he started to take an interest in you as well. Soon thereafter the two of you started dating. You''re not technically a gopnik - you are considered more of a wannabe - but the rest of the gopniks seem to accept you anyways. You’’re not sure what would happen if you ever broke up with <<$npc_nickname[''A9'']>>, however, as being his girlfriend and hanging out with the other gopniks has cost you any real, close friends outside of their group.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		traits['nerd_points'] = -10
@@ -1200,9 +1202,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'alternative':
 !!can choose two more starting tattoo''s
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Alternative</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart21.jpg"></center>'
-	'You march to your own tune. You’’re not a follower - you’’re a leader! You just have no desire to actually lead anything. You do what you want, when you want, and you do it with a fuck-it-all attitude. The local gopniks respect you and for the most part you get along with them. You’’re not one of them, however, but rather a kindred spirit looking to walk your own path and raise a little hell along the way.'
+	'You march to your own tune. You’’re not a follower - you’’re a leader! You just have no desire to actually lead anything. You do what you want when you want and you do it with a fuck-it-all attitude. The local gopniks respect you and for the most part you get along with them. You''re not one of them, however, but rather a kindred spirit looking to walk your own path and raise a little hell along the way.'
 	*nl
-	'Unlike the gopniks, you have far less interest in fighting or causing problems and a far more interest in looking for a good time - you love to party more than anything else. The cool kids don''t completely look down their nose at you, even if they don''t aprove or you clothes, they respect your love of looking nice and having a good time. Because of your behavior, you have problems at home and school. This is especially true with your mother and stepfather, who see you going down the wrong path.'
+	'Unlike the gopniks, you have far less interest in fighting or causing problems, instead just looking for a good time - you love to party more than anything else. The cool kids don''t completely look down their nose at you. Even if they don''t approve of your clothes, they respect your love of looking nice and having a good time. You have problems at home and school due to your behavior. This is especially true with your mother and stepfather, who see you going down the wrong path.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		traits['nerd_points'] = -20
@@ -1293,7 +1295,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'friendless':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Friendless</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart22.jpg"></center>'
-	'You were never very social and you never learned how to make friends. You were often made fun of or bullied by the other kids as you grew up. As such, you naturally shied away from them, an action that only served to isolate you even further. Now, years later, you have yet to make any real friends - even Vasily, who is your closest friend, wouldn''t be considered a particularly close one. In public he scrons you like all the rest but in private Vasily is a little nicer.'
+	'You were never very social and never learned how to make friends. You were often made fun of or bullied by the other kids as you grew up. As such, you naturally shielded away from them, an action that only served to isolate you even further. Now, years later, you have yet to make any real friends - even Vasily, who is your closest friend, wouldn''t be considered a particularly close one. In public, he scorns you like all the rest, but is a little nicer in private.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'outcast'
@@ -1314,9 +1316,9 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'uglyduckling':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Ugly duckling</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart23.jpg"></center>'
-	'Some girls blossom early, and some have natural good looks… you got neither. In fact, you seem to have been cursed with an androgynous face and body. You have been mistaken for a boy more times than you would care to admit. You have never learned to use makup maybe you should, it might help make people realize you are indeed a girl.'
+	'Some girls blossom early and some have natural good looks...you got neither. In fact, you seem to have been cursed with an androgynous face and body. You have been mistaken for a boy more times than you would care to admit. You have never learned to use makeup, but maybe you should. It might help make people realize you are indeed a girl.'
 	*nl
-	'Your body seemed to have grown out of sync, leaving you looking odd and, at best, unattractive for most of your life. Now in your teens, your body is starting to even out in growth but you are still very androgynous, and you are still considered by most to be ugly. You looks has made you a social pariah, no one seems to like you or want to spend time with you unless they are making fun of you.'
+	'Your body seemed to have grown out of sync, leaving you looking odd and, at best, unattractive for most of your life. Now in your teens, your body is starting to even out in growth but you are still very androgynous and you are still considered by most to be ugly. Your lack of good looks has made you a social pariah. Nobody seems to like you or want to spend time with you unless they are making fun of you.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'outcast'
@@ -1341,7 +1343,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'goodgirl':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Good girl</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart24.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are a good girl, the kind parents, teachers and adults love, but the other kids hate. You always reminded the teacher to give out homework and you would tell on anyone for doing anything. You love the attention you get from adults, and while at times it can be lonely you are still pretty happy knowing you''re a good girl. You also regularly attend church just like any good girl should. The nerds seem to tolerate you the most, you suppose because they almost never misbehave and always do their homework anyways.'
+	'You are a good girl. The kind parents, teachers and adults love, but the other kids hate. You always reminded the teacher to give out homework and you would tell on anyone for doing anything. You love the attention you get from adults, and while you can feel lonely at times,  you are still pretty happy knowing you''re a good girl. You also regularly attend church just like any good girl should. The nerds seem to tolerate you the most, probably because they almost never misbehave and always do their homework anyways.'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		traits['nerd_points'] = 100
@@ -1384,11 +1386,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'slut':
 !!If you can do uniforms then they can choose inappropriate
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Slut</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart25.jpg"></center>'
-	'You were the first girl at your age to lose her virginity, to your childhood friend Vasily. You became curious about sex far sooner than other kids your age and started masturbating long before the others in your year, you also found a desire for pornography and would masturbate to it. You loved the sensation so much that you wanted to find out how good sex would feel. Once you tried it, you learned that you loved it - you really love everything about it.'
+	'You were the first girl at your age to lose her virginity, to your childhood friend Vasily. You became curious about sex far sooner than other kids your age and started masturbating long before the others in your year. You also found a desire for pornography and would masturbate to it. You loved the sensation so much that you wanted to find out how good sex would feel. Once you tried it, you learned that you loved it - you really love everything about it.'
 	*nl
-	'The boys took advantage of your sexual needs and made you give them hand jobs which then led to blowjobs under the bleachers during recess and after school (sometimes they would return the favour by fingering you or a few times even eating you out) - you always savored swallowing their cum, and you even love how it tastes. The only thing you like more than sucking cock and swallowing cum is getting fucked by huge cock while sucking on another one.'
+	'The boys took advantage of your sexual needs and made you give them handjobs, which then led to blowjobs under the bleachers during recess and after school (sometimes they would return the favour by fingering you or a few times even eating you out) You always savored swallowing their cum, and you even love how it tastes. The only thing you like more than sucking cock and swallowing cum is getting fucked by a huge cock while sucking on another one.'
 	*nl
-	'Though loving sex has made you a social pariah, the girls all hate you and the boys publicly mock you, though in private they don''t mind using you. The nerds though completely avoid you, while the gopniks seem to tolerate you the most or maybe they just like to keep you handy to suck their dicks.'
+	'However, your sex addiction has made you a social pariah. The girls all despise you and the boys publicly mock you, although they don''t mind using you. The nerds completely avoid you, while the gopniks seem to tolerate you the most (likely because they enjoy your blowjobs)'
 	act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		gs 'preSYS', 'outcast'
@@ -1461,9 +1463,9 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'goth':
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Goth</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pre/sys/altstart28.jpg"></center>'
-	'There is always an oddball, the weirdo at every school, and at yours, it seems you are the one. You have never fit in, you have always felt different, like a person standing outside looking in at the world. You never felt like you fit in, at least until you watched some American movies and saw goths and suddenly you felt like you belonged. You quickly used all the allowance you had to buy new clothes and makeup so you could finally feel good about yourself. Your family doesn''t approve, hell no one seems to approve but you don''t care.'
+	'There is always an oddball, the weirdo at every school and at yours, it seems you are the one. You have always felt different, like a person standing outside looking in at the world. You never felt like you fit in, at least until you watched some American movies, saw some goths and suddenly you felt like you belonged. You quickly used all the allowance you had to buy new clothes and makeup so you could finally feel good about yourself. Your family doesn''t approve, hell no one seems to approve but you don''t care.'
 	*nl
-    'You are the school''s resident Goth. The Dark Temptress that all the boys secretly dream of, weaver of bad poetry and suicide covenants... Yep, people have too much imagination. Most adults think that you are going to sacrifice their children, everyone seems to think you are going to sacrifice someone or commit suicide. The school''s kids aren''t better, with the so-called "cool girls" leading an ostracism campaign against you... Sigh... Fortunately, not everyone is a brainwashed sheep happily following all along, a few think for themselves. The nerds like your reading proclivity and that you are into some of the same things they are; you think they might even invite you to their game one day. A couple of the Gopniks like your party attitude, specifically the kids in the band Pizdá Buysto seem to respect your artistic disposition. Or maybe their lead singer just wants to get in your panties, it''s hard to tell.'
+    'You are the school''s resident Goth. The Dark Temptress that all the boys secretly dream of, weaver of bad poetry and suicide covenants... Yep, people have too much imagination. Most adults think that you are going to sacrifice their children. In fact, everyone seems to think you are going to sacrifice someone or commit suicide. The school''s kids aren''t better, with the so-called "cool girls" leading an ostracism campaign against you... Sigh... Fortunately, not everyone is a brainwashed sheep happily following all along, a few think for themselves. The nerds like your reading proclivity and that you are into some of the same things they are; you think they might even invite you to their game one day. A couple of the Gopniks like your party attitude, specifically the kids in the band Pizdá Buysto, who seem to respect your artistic disposition. Or maybe their lead singer just wants to get in your panties, it''s hard to tell.'
     act 'Select another': gt 'preSYS', 'charselect'
 	act 'Confirm this option':
 		traits['nerd_points'] = -10