Text edits (again)

locations/albina_lazar_sex.qsrc

@@ -68,7 +68,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'watch_porn':
 		else
 			'You''re now feeling extremely horny, and the thought of someone catching you turns you on even more. You put your phone to the side and start fondling away at your engorged clit with one hand while using the other to slide some fingers into your wet hole and start finger banging yourself.'
 		end
-		$orgasm_txt = 'A few minutes of this is enough to bring you to climax and you pull your fingers out and clamp your hand against your mouth as you keeping vigoursly rubbing your clit and bring yourself to orgasm, hoping your muffled cries of pleasure don''t draw any attention.'
+		$orgasm_txt = 'A few minutes of this is enough to bring you to climax and you pull your fingers out and clamp your hand against your mouth as you keeping vigorously rubbing your clit and bring yourself to orgasm, hoping your muffled cries of pleasure don''t draw any attention.'
 		$orgasm_or = 'custom'
 		gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 5, 'masturbate'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -90,9 +90,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz2.jpg"></center>'
 		'You keep watching as she pulls his dick out of her mouth with a loud slurp, ropes of her saliva covering his shaft as she gasps for air.' 
 		'She grins up at him before standing and wiggling out of her thong. She then climbs onto the bed and gets on her back before leaning her head over the edge. You push the door open just a little more so you can see all the action.' 
-		'Albina smiles and beckons Lazar over before opening her mouth wide. Lazar steps in and shoves his cock down her throat, causing her to gag before he starts face fucking her. He''s somewhat rough, yet Albina seems to be enjoying it. Despite gagging and choking, she vigoursly rubs her clit as he slams his cock in and out of her throat.'
+		'Albina smiles and beckons Lazar over before opening her mouth wide. Lazar steps in and shoves his cock down her throat, causing her to gag before he starts face fucking her. He''s somewhat rough, yet Albina seems to be enjoying it. Despite gagging and choking, she vigorously rubs her clit and fingers herself as he slams his cock in and out of her throat.'
 		*nl
-		'Drool dribbles out of her mouth and runs down her face, getting in her hair as he continues face fucking her. He only stops when it looks like Albina is about to pass out. He pulls out and she splutters a large amount of drool down her face as she gasps for air.'
+		'Drool dribbles out of her mouth and runs down her face, getting in her hair as he continues face fucking her. He only stops when it looks like Albina is about to pass out. He pulls out and she splutters a large amount of drool down her face as she gasps for air before sucking on her soaked fingers.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep watching':
@@ -309,7 +309,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'masturbate':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/albinahome/masturbate.jpg"></center>'
 	'Having become aroused by what you saw, you quietly close the door and quickly make your way to the bathroom, where you lock the door and sit on the toilet.'
 	'The thought of Albina and Lazar having sex down the hall turns you on, so you pull your panties down and start pleasuring yourself, not caring if anyone catches you. You start fondling away at your clit with one hand while using the other to finger bang yourself.'
-	$orgasm_txt = 'A few minutes of this is enough to bring you to climax and you pull your fingers out and clamp your hand against your mouth as you keeping vigoursly rubbing your clit and bring yourself to orgasm, hoping your muffled cries of pleasure don''t draw any attention.'
+	$orgasm_txt = 'A few minutes of this is enough to bring you to climax and you pull your fingers out and clamp your hand against your mouth as you keeping vigorously rubbing your clit and bring yourself to orgasm, hoping your muffled cries of pleasure don''t draw any attention.'
 	$orgasm_or = 'custom'
 	gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 5, 'masturbate'
 	gs 'stat'

locations/gschool_jock_chats.qsrc

@@ -403,25 +403,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 			gs 'stat'
 			
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big18.jpg"></center>'
-			'You see Christina chatting with Lina when you approach her. As Christina notices you, she glares at you before turning to Lina.'
-			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves.'
-			'Christina turns back to you. "What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
-			'You decide to ignore her attitude. "I believe Natasha owes you some money. Five hundred rubles?"'
-			'"What about it? It''s not any of your business," she snaps.'
+			'You see Christina chatting with Lina as you approach. When she notices you, she glares at you before turning to Lina.'
+			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves before Christina turns back to you. "What do you want?"'
+			'You ignore her attitude. "Natasha owes you money, right? Five hundred rubles?"'
+			'"Yeah, what about it? It''s not any of your business," she snaps.'
 			'"Actually, it is," you say, pulling out the money and handing it to her. "I''m here to pay you back."'
 			'She snatches the money from your hand. "What, was she too scared to speak to me? She had to get you to do it for her?"'
-			'"Something like that," you reply. "Anyways, don''t lend her any more money."'
-			'"Wasn''t planning to. It took her long enough to pay this one back!"'
-			'She counts out the money and a slight smile crosses her face. "Alright, we''re done here. You can leave now," she says.'
+			'"Something like that," you reply. "Anyway, don''t lend her any more money."'
+			'"Wasn''t planning to. It took her long enough to pay this back!" She counts out the money and a slight smile crosses her face. "Alright, we''re done here. You can leave now."'
 			
 			act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 		end
 	elseif christinaQW['subpath'] >= 2:
 		if christinaQW['subpath'] >= 3:
-			'As you pass by Christina, she looks at you triumphantly. "Don''t forget my little slave! Showers after the gym class..."'
+			'As you pass by Christina, she looks at you triumphantly. "Don''t forget my little slave! Showers after gym class..."'
 			'Before you''re able to respond, she turns around and walks away.'
 		else
-			'"I''m looking forward to after P.E. class." Christina says with a wicked smile.'
+			'"I''m looking forward to after P.E. class," Christina says with a wicked smile.'
 			'"W-Why? What happens after class?"'
 			'"Oh, I don''t want to ruin the suprise, pet." Throwing one last smirk in your direction, she heads off to her next class.'
 		end
@@ -429,26 +427,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 		if LariskaQW['story'] = 3:
 			LariskaQW['story'] = 4
 			christinaQW['blackmail'] = 2
-			'Going up to Christina, you quietly say "I need to talk to you about something, Christina."'
-			'"What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m busy," she says, not even looking at you.'
+			'Walking up to Christina, you quietly say "I need to talk to you."'
+			'"What do you want? I''m busy," she says, not even looking at you.'
 			'Taking a deep breath, you say "Lariska. I want Lariska."'
 			'Suprised, she finally looks at you. "No, <<$pcs_nickname>>. She''s mine, and I don''t want you filling her head with nonsense."'
-			'"Well, the thing is you don''t really have a choice. Not a good one anyway." Pulling out your phone and checking to make sure nobody is looking, you show her a picture of her blowing the coach.'
-			'Her face turns bright red with anger and she hisses at you. "You fucking bitch. How did you get that?! If you show anybody..."'
-			'"I won''t...if you tell Lariska it''s okay to hang out with me outside of school! I mean, I would hate to see these pictures fall into Lizaveta''s hands..."'
-			'Her face turns even more red, if that were possible. "Fine," she spits out. "But I swear, if I even hear about these pictures again, I will fucking break you into tiny pieces!"'
+			'"Well, the thing is you don''t really have a choice. Not a good one anyway." Pulling out your phone and checking to make sure nobody''s looking, you show her a picture of her blowing the coach.'
+			'Her face turns bright red with anger and she hisses at you. "You fucking bitch! How did you get that?! If you show anybody..."'
+			'"I won''t...if you tell Lariska it''s okay to hang out with me outside of school. I mean, I would hate to see these pictures fall into Lizaveta''s hands..."'
+			'Her face turns even more red, if that were possible. "Fine," she spits out. "But I swear, if I even hear about these pictures again, I will break you into tiny fucking pieces!"'
 			'"Oh, you won''t. So long as you keep your word..." you say with a fake smile that doesn''t quite reach your eyes. "Now do be a dear and let her know she''s free to do whatever she wants outside of school, will you?"'
 			'"Oh, and if you try and punish her for this, I will know," the threat clear on your face. Turning on your heels, you head off to your next class, smiling.'
 		else
 			christinaQW['blackmail'] = 2
-			'Going up to Christina, you quietly say "I need to talk to you about something, Christina."'
-			'"What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m busy," she says, not even looking at you.'
+			'Walking up to Christina, you quietly say "I need to talk to you."'
+			'"What do you want? I''m busy," she says, not even looking at you.'
 			'"Oh, I just wanted you to know I have something you should see." Pulling out your phone and checking to make sure nobody is looking, you show her a picture of her blowing the coach.'
 			'Her face turns bright red with anger and she hisses at you. "You fucking bitch! How did you get that?! If you show anybody..."'
-			'"It would be a real shame if Lisaveta got her hands on these..." you say menacingly.'
+			'"It would be a real shame if Lizaveta got her hands on these..." you say menacingly.'
 			'Glaring at you, her hands balled into fists, she says quietly "What the fuck do you want from me, bitch?"'
 			'"Oh, I haven''t decided yet. When I do, I''ll let you know. I''m sure whatever I decide I want, you''ll give it to me without a fuss. In the meantime, stay away from me."'
-			'Her face turns even more red, if that were possible. "Fine," she spits out. "But I swear, if I even hear about these pictures again, I will fucking break you into tiny pieces!"'
+			'Her face turns even more red, if that were possible. "Fine," she spits out. "But I swear, if I even hear about these pictures again, I will break you into tiny fucking pieces!"'
 			'"Oh, you won''t. So long as you keep your word..." you say with a fake smile that doesn''t quite reach your eyes. Turning on your heels, you head off to your next class, smiling.'
 		end
 	elseif christinaQW['blackmail'] = 2:
@@ -486,30 +484,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'christina':
 	if christinaQW['fight'] = 1 and NatbelQW['FriendLover'] = 2:
 			act 'Talk to Christina':
 			NatbelQW['chrispaid'] = 1
-			'You see Christina chatting with Lina when you approach her. As Christina notices you, she glares at you and then turns to Lina.'
-			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves.'
-			'Christina turns back to you, "What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
-			'You decide to ignore her attitude, "I wanted to speak to you privately about how you treat Natasha."'
+			'You see Christina chatting with Lina when as approach. When Christina notices you, she glares at you and then turns to Lina.'
+			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves before Christina turns back to you. "What do you want?"'
+			'You ignore her attitude. "I wanted to talk about how you treat Natasha."'
 			'"What about it?" she snaps. "It''s not any of your business!"'
-			'"Actually, it is, she''s my friend and I hate seeing you bully her so I''m asking you politely to stop as I don''t want to embarrass you in front of the others."'
-			'Christina doesn''t answer.'
-			'So you continue. "Right, well, I take it your silence means you agree? That is unless you want to go another round with me? I hope that won''t be necessary because I won''t stop at a simple beating this time!"'
-			'She nods in agreement and abruptly storms off.'
-			'With a grin you mutter to yourself, "Thank you, your highness."'
+			'"Actually, it is. She''s my friend, so I''m telling you to stop so I don''t have to beat your ass in front of everyone again."'
+			'Christina doesn''t answer, so you continue. "So we''re in agreement then? Unless you want to go another round with me? I hope not, because I won''t stop at a simple beating this time!"'
+			'She nods in agreement before storming off. With a grin on your face, you head to your next class.'
 		end
 	elseif christinaQW['blackmail'] = 2 and NatbelQW['FriendLover'] = 2:
 		act 'Talk to Christina':
 			NatbelQW['chrispaid'] = 1
-			'You see Christina chatting with Lina when you approach her. As Christina notices you, she glares at you and then turns to Lina.'
-			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves.'
-			'Christina turns back to you, "What do you want, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
-			'You decide to ignore her attitude, "I wanted to speak to you privately about how you treat Natasha."'
+			'You see Christina chatting with Lina when as approach. When Christina notices you, she glares at you and then turns to Lina.'
+			'"Later, Lina," she says. Lina smiles at Christina and leaves before Christina turns back to you. "What do you want?"'
+			'You ignore her attitude. "I wanted to talk about how you treat Natasha."'
 			'"What about it?" she snaps. "It''s not any of your business!"'
-			'"Actually, it is, she''s my friend and I hate seeing you bully her so I''m asking you politely to stop as I don''t want to embarrass you in front of the others."'
-			'Christina doesn''t answer.'
-			'So you continue. "Right, well, I take it your silence means you agree? That is unless you want me to release the recording I have of you?"'
-			'She nods in agreement and abruptly storms off.'
-			'With a grin you mutter to yourself, "Thank you, your highness."'
+			'"Actually, it is. She''s my friend, so I''m asking you to stop because I don''t want to embarrass you in front of the others."'
+			'"Fucking make me," she scoffs, so you pull out your phone and show her your recording of her blowing the coach.'
+			'She balls her fists in rage. "So we''re in agreement then? Unless you want everyone to see this?" you ask smugly.'
+			'She coldly glares at you before storming off without answering. A satisifed grin on your face, you head to your next class.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Time for the next class': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'