[Changed] Father file rewrite by EmporersTitan with code from nutluck and Violet Kitten (just like the last mis-labelled one) :frown:

locations/father.qsrc

@@ -49,7 +49,7 @@ if hcolfatherremember ! pcs_haircol:
         $texthcol = 'So you decided to become a blonde?'
     end
     
-    'Your stepfather looks at you for a second, noticing that something is different about you. His eyes widen as he notices your hair. "Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>, I see you dyed your hair! <<$texthcol>>" It looks good on you.'
+    'Your stepfather does a doulbe take of you as he notices your hair. "Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>, I see you dyed your hair! <<$texthcol>>" It looks good on you. He takes one last look at your new hair and goes back to watching T.V.'
     hcolfatherremember = pcs_haircol
 end
 
@@ -57,8 +57,8 @@ end
 if pirsA > 0 and pirsA < 10000 and pirsAfather=0 and pirsadaytalk!daystart:
     pirseerand=rand(1,100)
     pirsadaytalk=daystart
-    if pirseerand>=75:
-        'Your stepfather looks at your mouth funnily as you greet him. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, do you have something shiny in your mouth?"'
+    if pirseerand >= 75:
+        'Your stepfather looks at your mouth with a curious look as you greet him. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, do you have something shiny in your mouth?"'
         act'"No"':
             cla
             'You shake your head: "Umm, no! No I don''t!"'
@@ -66,12 +66,12 @@ if pirsA > 0 and pirsA < 10000 and pirsAfather=0 and pirsadaytalk!daystart:
             act 'Move away':gt $loc, $metka
         end
         
-        act'"Yes, want to see?"':
+        act'"Yes, would you like to see it?"':
             *clr & cla
             pirsAfather=1
             gs'stat'
             '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/body/piercings/a<<pirsA>>.jpg" ></center>'
-            'You open your mouth and stick out your tongue, showing him your piercing.'
+            'You open your mouth and stick out your tongue and wiggle it at him showing him your piercing.'
             if TouchedByFather=0:'Your stepfather shakes his head: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, tongue piercings are only for lewd women who use their mouth to please men."'
             if TouchedByFather>0:'Your stepfather grins: "Nice, I bet you could make someone feel really good with that..."'
             act 'Move away':gt $loc, $metka
@@ -81,21 +81,18 @@ if pirsA > 0 and pirsA < 10000 and pirsAfather=0 and pirsadaytalk!daystart:
 end
 
 ! lip piercing
-if pirsB > 0 and pirsB < 10000 and pirsBfather=0 and pirsbdaytalk!daystart:
+if pirsB > 0 and pirsB < 10000 and pirsBfather= 0 and pirsbdaytalk!daystart:
     pirsadbytalk=daystart
     'Your stepfather takes a long look at your mouth, specifically at your new piercing. He seems confused and asks: "Why did you get that?"'
-    act '"Don''t you think it looks cute?"':
+    act '"Don''t you like it? I thought it looked kind of cute."':
         *clr & cla
         pirsBfather=1
         gs'stat'
         '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/body/piercings/b<<pirsB>>.jpg" ></center>'
         'You shrug. "I don''t know... I just like the way lip rings look, so I got one. Don''t you think it looks cute?"'
-        if TouchedByFather=0:
-            'Your stepfather shakes his head: "Kids these days, always adding new holes to themselves..."'
-        end
-        if TouchedByFather>0:
-            'Your stepfather grins: "I must admit, it does look sexy on you."'
-        end
+        if TouchedByFather=0:'Your stepfather shakes his head: "Kids these days, always adding new holes to themselves..."'
+
+        if TouchedByFather>0:'Your stepfather grins: "I must admit, it does look sexy on you."'
         act 'Move away':gt 'father'
     end
     exit
@@ -104,7 +101,7 @@ end
 ! earrings
 if pirsC > 0 and pirsC < 10000 and pirsCfather=0:
     pirsCfather=1
-    'Your stepfather looks at your ears, noting your earrings: "I see you got your ears pierced? Your earrings are very cute."'
+    'Your stepfather looks at your ears, noting your earrings: "I see you got your ears pierced, Your earrings are very cute."'
 end
 
 ! nose ring
@@ -135,17 +132,13 @@ if tatlip>0 and fatherTatLip=0 and npc_rel['A28']>=60:
 end
 
 if $clothingworntype = 'nude' and npc_pregtalk['A28'] = 0 and func('body_din','pregnancyVisibility') = 1:
-    'Your stepfather looks at your belly with a surprised look on his face: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re pregnant?"'
-    if npc_sex['A28']!0:
-        'You see him hesitate for a second, as if weighing whether he should say something or not. He finally does: "It''s not mine, I hope?"'
-    end
+    'Your stepfather looks at your belly with a surprised look on his face. He shakes his head in disappointment before looking back at you.: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re pregnant?"'
+    if npc_sex['A28']!0: 'You see him hesitate for a second, as if weighing whether he should say something or not. He finally does: "All i can say is that i hope the baby is not mine... i''m so disappointed in you "<<pcs_nickname>>"'
     npc_pregtalk['A28'] = 1
     
 elseif $clothingworntype ! 'nude' and npc_pregtalk['A28'] = 0 and func('body_din','pregnancyVisibility') = 1:
-    'Your stepfather looks at your belly with a surprised look on his face: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re pregnant?"'
-    if npc_sex['A28']!0:
-        'You see him hesitate for a second, as if weighing whether he should say something or not. He finally does: "It''s not mine, I hope?"'
-    end
+    'Your stepfather looks at your belly with a surprised look on his face. He shakes his head in disappointment before looking back at you.: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''re pregnant?"'
+    if npc_sex['A28']!0: 'You see him hesitate for a second, as if weighing whether he should say something or not. He finally does: "All i can say is that i hope that the baby is not mine... i''m so disappointed in you "<<$pcs_nickname>>"'
     npc_pregtalk['A28'] = 1
 end
 
@@ -153,7 +146,7 @@ end
 
 if week < 6:
     if hour = 8:
-        '"Alright <<$pcs_nickname>>. It''s getting late, I need to go to work. See you later."'
+        '"Alright <<$pcs_nickname>>. I need to leave for work now or i''ll be late. See you later."'
         cla
         act '<B>Continue</B>':gt $loc, $metka
         exit
@@ -174,7 +167,7 @@ if week >= 6:
         act '<B>Continue</B>':gt $loc, $metka
         exit
     elseif father_go = 1 and hour >= 16:
-        'Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have to go to the garage.'
+        'Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have to go to the garage, got to get some more work done on the truck.'
         cla
         act '<B>Continue</B>':gt $loc, $metka
         exit
@@ -188,7 +181,7 @@ act 'Chat':
     gs 'stat'
     '<center><B><font color=maroon>Your stepfather, Vladimir Mikhailovich Scriabin</font></B></center>'
     '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/vladimir/father.jpg"></center>'
-    'Your stepfather sits on the couch in the living room, he is watching TV. You decide to join for a while and sit down next to him.'
+    'Your stepfather is sittting on the couch in the living room, he is watching TV. You decide to join him for a while and sit down next to him.'
 
     dynamic $fatherRep
 
@@ -224,7 +217,7 @@ if (hour > 10 and week < 6) or week >= 6:
         act 'Move away':gt 'father'
 
         if fatherPayDay = daystart:
-            'Trying your cutest face on your stepfather, you ask him for some money. He just shook his head wearily: "No, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I''ve already given you some money today, don''t be greedy."'
+            'Trying your cutest face on your stepfather, you ask him for some money. He just shakes his head wearily: "No, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I''ve already given you some money today, don''t be greedy."'
         else
             if (npc_rel['A28'] <= 40 or (pcs_apprnc + (npc_rel['A28']/10)) <= 60) and TouchedByFather = 0:
                 'You ask your stepfather for some money, but he shakes his head in response: "I already gave my salary to your mother, go ask her."'
@@ -281,9 +274,7 @@ if (hour > 10 and week < 6) or week >= 6:
                     end
                 end
 
-                if FatherMolest > 1:
-                    '"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I already said no."'
-                end
+                if FatherMolest > 1:'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I already said no."'
             end
         end
     end
@@ -344,8 +335,7 @@ if (hour > 10 and week < 6) or week >= 6:
             else
                 'Your stepfather shook his head and said "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>. The garage already has more stuff in it than I would like, there''s simply no room."'
             end
-        act 'Move away':gt 'father'
-        
+			act 'Move away':gt 'father'			
         end
     end
 
@@ -407,7 +397,7 @@ if (hour > 10 and week < 6) or week >= 6:
                                         gs 'stat'
                                         gs 'panties', 'dispose'
                                         '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/vladimir/sex/fatherim50.jpg"></center>'
-                                        'Wanting to see just how riled up you can get your stepfather, you bend over and slowly pull your panties down. "Is this better, Daddy?" you sweetly ask him, and your stepfather panics while you run your hands over your naked ass, gently kneading your ass cheeks. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, please don''t do that! Someone could come in at any second! What do you think your mother would do to you AND me when she sees this!?" he whispers, as he moves to you and frantically tries to cover you up. You sweetly smile at him and whisper: "Relax Daddy, we''re fine! Here, for later," as you stuff your panties in his pocket.'
+                                        'Wanting to see just how riled up you can get your stepfather, you bend over and slowly pull your panties down. "Is this better, Daddy?" you sweetly ask him, and your stepfather panics while you run your hands over your naked ass, gently kneading your ass cheeks. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, please don''t do that! Someone could come in at any second! What do you think your mother would do to you AND me if she saw this!?" he whispers, as he moves to you and frantically tries to cover you up. You sweetly smile at him and whisper: "Relax Daddy, we''re fine! Here, for later," as you stuff your panties in his pocket.'
                                         act 'Move away':gt $loc, $metka
                                     end
                                 end