[text edit] clean up text in abductionCustomer

locations/abductionCustomer.qsrc

@@ -3,7 +3,7 @@
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGate':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'Your master approaches you, "Hello, slave slut."'
-	'"I have a customer here, who came to rent you for a while. Do whatever he asks of you."'
+	'"I have a customer here who came to rent you for a while. Do whatever he asks of you."'
 	buyout = 0
 	act 'Yes, Master.':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGo'
 end
@@ -23,12 +23,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGo':
 	i = rand(1,3)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/ledonfour<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Your master removes your regular chains and attaches a leash to your collar.'
-	'You are being led up the stairs into the house above your cellar.'
-	'When you enter the hall your master orders you on your knees, "Kneel slave then continue on your four legs just like the bitch you are."'
+	'You are led up the stairs into the house above your cellar.'
+	'When you enter the hall, your master orders you on your knees, "Kneel slave then continue on your four legs just like the bitch you are."'
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
 		'You are led to the room where your customer awaits. Your leash is handed to him.'
 	else
-		'You are led to the room where your customer awaits. Your leash is handed to him and your master leaves. The only room door closes behind him leaving you alone with your customer.'
+		'You are led to the room where your customer awaits. Your leash is handed to him, and your master leaves. The room''s only door closes behind him, leaving you alone with your customer.'
 	end
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer'
 end
@@ -177,7 +177,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 		'As you are led to the room, as usual, you see the man standing opposite of you.'
 		'Right away you can see that he is just another bastard coming here to use your <<age>> years young body.'
 		'Your master leaves you in the center of the room. You are still kneeling with the leash attached to your collar.'
-		'As the door closes behind him the customer slowly turns, so you can finally see his face.'
+		'As the door closes behind him, the customer slowly turns, so you can finally see his face.'
 		act 'Look at his face':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyout1'
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneelmaster.mp4"></video></center>'
@@ -187,12 +187,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 	end
 
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
-		'Your master tells the customer, "So this is her. You can make sure she''s a virgin as her hymen is intact."'
+		'Your master tells the customer, "So this is her. You can be sure she''s a virgin as her hymen is intact."'
 		'"I believe you. She''s not the first virgin slut that you''ve delivered to me, is she?"'
 		'"No, she definitely is not! How many has it been so far, four, five?"'
-		'"In your establishment I have paid for six virgins in total. This one is the seventh.'
+		'"In your establishment, I have paid for six virgins in total. This one is the seventh.'
 		if age < 17:
-			'"Good number. Good slut, too. She''s only <<age>> years old, I suppose her vagina will be especially tight."'
+			'"Good number. Good slut, too. She''s only <<age>> years old. I suppose her vagina will be especially tight."'
 			'"That''s how I like it."'
 		else
 			'"Good number. She''s a good slut, too."'
@@ -201,7 +201,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 		act 'Sob and wait':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin1'
 	else
 		if buyout = 0:
-			'He is clearly expecting you to start work in pleasuring him. You decide to:'
+			'He is clearly expecting you to start working to pleasure him. You decide to:'
 			act 'Show him your beautiful body':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-show'
 			act 'Unzip his pants':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-unzip'
 		end
@@ -210,17 +210,17 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/leonid/leonid.jpg"></center>'
-	'As you look up at his face a chill runs down your spine - you know him!'
+	'As you look up at his face, a chill runs down your spine - you know him!'
 	'You remember this man from one of the parent-school conferences. It''s Dimka''s dad, <<$bName>>..'
 	'And obviously he recognizes you too, "Oh... what the... who do we have here? Isn''t this the known missing person, <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>?'
 	'With a trembling voice only a few words leave your mouth, "Th...that''s me mister <<$bSurname>>.."'
 	'"You do realize that the police have already given up searching for you. As if they made any effort though..."'
 	'"I-I don''t even know how long I''ve been here. The only thing I remember is being a plaything for these perverts..."'
-	'After these words there is a short period of silence. You just keep kneeling, as you are trained with your back straight and breasts jutting forward, so you give your customers something nice to look at.'
+	'After these words there is a short period of silence. Despite the unexpected situation, you keep kneeling with your back straight and breasts jutting forward, as you have been trained so your customers have something nice to look at.'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneel2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Then suddenly the look on <<$bName>>''s face changes from surprised to something else.'
+	'Then suddenly, the look on <<$bName>>''s face changes from surprised to something else.'
 	'He comes up to you and gently caresses your face, "Plaything, you say? And do you like it?"'
-	'Surprised by such a question you wait with your answer:'
+	'Surprised by such a question, you consider how to reply:'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'hard'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -239,20 +239,20 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout2':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneelmaster.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'"What a nice submissive slut you have become. What would your mother say about this?"'
-	'"I rather you wouldn''t let her know how I ended up."'
+	'"I''d rather you didn''t let her know how I ended up."'
 	'"This establishment really gets the job done. I must commend the owner."'
-	'With these words he leaves the room. You can hear an echo of a discussion between him and your master.'
-	'After a while <<$bName>> comes back, "Let''s go <<$pcs_firstname>>.". He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room to enter into the hallway.'
+	'With these words, he leaves the room. You can hear an echo of a discussion between him and your master.'
+	'After a while, <<$bName>> comes back, "Let''s go <<$pcs_firstname>>.". He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
 	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I have never been in this part of the house before."'
 	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you. I paid for you. You are now my property. You are... my slavegirl."'
-	'Surprised you can only think, it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones.'
+	'Surprised. you can only think, "it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones."'
 	'You are still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into his trunk.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout3':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreleonid1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'"In that case let''s have some fun before we get straight to business."'
-	'He slaps your face so hard that you lose your balance and fall face first into the floor.'
+	'"In that case, let''s have some fun before we get straight to business."'
+	'He slaps your face so hard that you lose your balance and fall face first onto the floor.'
 	'You are taken by surprise by the blow - you had started to think that you were finally about to be saved from all of this.'
 	'However, <<$bName>> seems to be as perverted as all the other men that have used you previously.'
 	'Stepping above you as you helplessly lie on the floor, he opens his zipper to pull out his dick.'
@@ -273,21 +273,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout3':
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefuckanalroughleonid2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are left lying on the floor while <<$bName>>''s cum still flowing out of your gaping ass.'
+	'You are left lying on the floor with <<$bName>>''s cum still flowing out of your gaping ass.'
 	'He goes through the door. You can hear an echo of your master''s and his voices discussing something you can''t make out.'
-	'In a few minutes <<$bName>> comes back, "I really like you <<$pcs_firstname>>."'
-	'He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room to enter into the hallway.'
+	'In a few minutes, <<$bName>> comes back, "I really like you <<$pcs_firstname>>."'
+	'He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
 	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I have never been in this part of the house."'
 	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you. I paid for you. You are now my property. You are... my slavegirl."'
-	'Surprised you can only think, it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones.'
+	'Surprised you can only think, "it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones."'
 	'You are still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into his trunk.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/garage.jpg"></center>'
-	'Stuffed inside of the trunk you can only hear the sound of the engine and the pavement below as he drives you somewhere unknown.'
-	'After an unknown amount of time, the sound of the pavement stops and the engine shuts off. Their echoes from bouncing off the walls cease leaving only silence.'
-	'<<$bName>> opens the trunk. Your eyes blink to adjust to the dimly lit area and you that you are in a parking garage. There are no open spaces between the current level and the above one, so you think to yourself that this is underground.'
+	'Stuffed inside of the trunk, you can only hear the sound of the engine and the pavement below as he drives you somewhere unknown.'
+	'After an unknown amount of time, the sound of the pavement stops, and the engine shuts off, leaving only silence.'
+	'<<$bName>> opens the trunk. Your eyes blink to adjust to the dimly lit area, and you realize that you are in a parking garage. There are no open spaces between the current level and the above one, so you think to yourself that this is underground.'
 	'You climb out still naked and collared like a bitch. It seems he doesn''t care about your feelings at all.'
 	'He takes your leash and leads you while you are on all fours up the stairs. You both exit through the upstairs stairwell door into a room that appears to be an office.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'leonid', 'firstTime'
@@ -296,12 +296,12 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin1':
 	minut += 10
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Your master leaves and your body starts to shiver.'
+	'Your master leaves, and your body starts to shiver.'
 	'"Don''t worry slut, because this will only hurt a lot," the customer says. He is clearly enjoying himself.'
 	'You run to the far corner of the room. It''s a futile attempt to get as far away from him as you can.'
 	'He walks up to you and grabs you by the hair. He drags you as a painful, terrified scream emits from your throat to something that looks like a bench in the center of the room.'
-	'He forcefully yanks your hair to make you climb onto the bench like structure. He punches you in the stomach and you collapse. He flips you over onto your back and binds your arms above your head with handcuffs. He follows with putting your legs into stirrups then follows with legcuffs to hold you in place. You realize that this gives him unlimited access to your virgin pussy.'
-	'Your head is bound so that you have an unobstructed view on your own pussy. This is to ensure that you watch as he tears your terrorified cunt apart.'
+	'He forcefully yanks your hair to make you climb onto the bench like structure. He punches you in the stomach, and you collapse. He flips you over onto your back and binds your arms above your head with handcuffs. He follows with putting your legs into stirrups then follows with legcuffs to hold you in place. You realize that this gives him unlimited access to your virgin pussy.'
+	'Your head is bound so that you have an unobstructed view on your own pussy. This is to ensure that you watch as he tears your terrified cunt apart.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin2'
 end
@@ -309,8 +309,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin2':
 	minut += 2
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He starts to slowly undress, with his back to you, to enhance your terror. With a clink on the floor you can tell that his pants, holding a belt, hits the concrete floor. He slowly turns around to face you and you can finally see his naked body. His cock sways for a moment before stopping in front of your face.'
-	'"With renewed terror you start to cry, because the sight of his <<dick>> cm thick <<$dick_girth>> phallus is just terrifying."'
+	'He starts to slowly undress, with his back to you to enhance your terror. With a clink on the floor, you can tell that his pants, holding a belt, have hit the concrete floor. He slowly turns around to face you, and you can finally see his naked body. His cock sways for a moment before stopping in front of your face.'
+	'"With renewed terror, you start to cry at the sight of his <<dick>> cm thick <<$dick_girth>> phallus."'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin3'
 end
@@ -318,18 +318,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin3':
 	minut += 10
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin3.jpg"></center>'
 	'He starts to jerk his cock, all the while looking at your eyes then to your bound and helpless nude body. The sight slowly makes his cock hard.'
-	'In his eyes you can see he relishes looking at you in your despair.'
+	'In his eyes, you can see he relishes looking at you in your despair.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin4'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin4.jpg"></center>'
-	'He, finally, reaches for you and brings the tip of his phallus to the entrace of your virgin pussy.'
+	'He finally reaches for you and brings the tip of his phallus to the entrance of your virgin pussy.'
 	'He covers his <<$dick_girth>> member in a thick layer of lube then starts to slowly press against the opening of your vagina.'
-	'With his hands he spreads your pussy lips apart to help ease the entry for his member.'
+	'With his hands, he spreads your pussy lips apart to help ease the entry for his member.'
 	'"Now behold girl. You are about to become a woman," he exclaims.'
 	'He pushes it in with a single long thrust that almost hits the bottom of your virgin cunt.'
-	'A terrible pain rips through your body that begins where your hymen was. It spreads like a fire throughout your body. A trickle of red blood runs down the shaft of his cock.'
+	'A terrible pain rips through your body, beginning where your hymen was and spreading like a fire. A trickle of red blood runs down the shaft of his cock.'
 	pcs_vag += 1
 	stat['vaginal'] += 1
 	pain['vaginal'] += 20
@@ -339,8 +339,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin4':
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin5':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin5.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He leaves his cock inside you. He looks directly at your face to enjoy the expression that is on your face that is the reaction to you seeing your blood that is coating his cock.'
-	'He then slams his cock back into you. The pain you feel is renewed while he grunts in pleasure the shows he is enjoying himself.'
+	'He pulls his cock back out and shows it to you, enjoying the expression you make seeing your blood coating it.'
+	'He then slams his cock back into you. The pain you feel is renewed while he grunts in pleasure.'
 	'He feels accomplishment in his handiwork and sneers at you. He brutally thrusts into your pussy over and over again. He often hits your cervix with his <<dick>> cm long thick <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
 	pain['vaginal'] += 10
 	pain['cervix'] += 10
@@ -353,7 +353,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin6':
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin6.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'"And now whore you will receive your first cum. You will become the breeder you were always supposed to be."'
-	'As renewed tears streams down your cheeks he spurts his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm <<dick>> cm deep inside your pussy. You can feel hit your cervix and you shudder at the thought of you getting intionally pregnant from this monster.'
+	'As renewed tears streams down your cheeks, he spurts his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm <<dick>> cm deep inside your pussy. You can feel it hit your cervix, and you shudder at the thought of you getting pregnant from this monster.'
 	gs 'cum_call', 'pussy', 'deflowering pervert'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Cry more':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin7'
@@ -361,12 +361,12 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin7':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin7.jpg"></center>'
 	'He rests with his dick deep inside you for a while. He is enjoying the sight of your cries and the despair in your situation.'
-	'"As his <<$dick_girth>> member becomes flaccid it slides free of your abused pussy. He reaches out of sight and brings into view a dildo that looks almost exactly like his own dick. You think that it has probably been modeled from it."'
-	'"My cum that I just gave youis not meant to just drip out of you. You will receive another gift from me. One that will keep my present inside you."'
-	'With these words he lifts your ass in the air so the cum doesn''t flow out then brutally shoves the dildo, shaped after his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock, all the way inside you. The dildo is pushed so deep into you that only its brightly coloured base is peeking out of your abused hole.'
-	'When it''s in he takes some pieces of duct tape and wraps it over your pussy to cover your lips. This keeps the dildo firmly stuck inside.'
-	'He uncuffs you from the bench, but pulls your arms to be behind your back. This is probably to keep you from removing the shaft.'
-	'"Now run slut and enjoy my gifts even more," He leaves laughing.'
+	'"As his <<$dick_girth>> member becomes flaccid, it slides free of your abused pussy. He reaches out of sight and brings into view a dildo that looks almost exactly like his own dick. You think that it has probably been modeled from it."'
+	'"My cum that I just gave you is not meant to just drip out of you. You will receive another gift from me, one that will keep my present inside you."'
+	'With these words, he lifts your ass in the air so the cum doesn''t flow out then brutally shoves the dildo, shaped after his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock, all the way inside you. The dildo is pushed so deep into you that only its brightly coloured base peeks out of your abused hole.'
+	'He then takes some pieces of duct tape and wraps them over your pussy to cover your lips and keep the dildo firmly stuck inside.'
+	'He uncuffs you from the bench, but pulls your arms behind your back. This is probably to keep you from removing the shaft.'
+	'"Now run slut and enjoy my gifts even more," he leaves laughing.'
 	pain['vaginal'] += 10
 	pain['cervix'] += 10
 	pain['belly'] += 20
@@ -389,8 +389,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin9':
 	minut += 480
 	pcs_sleep += 70
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin9.jpg"></center>'
-	'Still having your hands bound you are put on your bed and tied to the wall on a short leash.'
-	'Your master leaves and you are left lying on the bed. Your vagina is still plugged by this <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dildo.'
+	'Still having your hands bound, you are put on your bed and tied to the wall on a short leash.'
+	'Your master leaves, and you are left lying on the bed. Your vagina is still plugged by this <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dildo.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Try to rest':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin10'
 end
@@ -401,12 +401,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin10':
 	'The sound of your master coming downstairs wakes you up.'
 	'You must have fallen asleep from the exhaustion.'
 	*nl
-	'Kneel and stick your ass high in the air slut.'
+	'"Kneel and stick your ass high in the air slut."'
 	'You are so desperate that you don''t even think about not doing what he orders you to do.'
 	'You just stick your ass as high as possible. It points so he has good access to both your ass and your ruthlessly plugged deflowered pussy.'
 	'Your master kneels down to remove the duct tape with a single pull. You yelp in pain from the tiny pubic hairs that get ripped out with the tape. He puts his fingers inside you to grab the stuck dildo.'
 	'Slowly, he takes it out. Remnants of your virgin blood and the customer''s sperm are smeared all over it.'
-	'Your empty vagina gives you a rush of relief as the cool air rushes in to fill the void.'
+	'Your empty vagina gives you a rush of relief as the cool air flows in to fill the void.'
 	'Your master unties you then adjusts your leash. As he leaves, he tells you, "Be glad that you can be deflowered only once you silly girl."'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
@@ -425,15 +425,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-unzip':
 	elseif dick >= 25:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip2.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock with horror. You image what terrible things this sizeable penis will do to your tender body.'
+		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock with horror. You image what terrible things this sizable penis will do to your tender body.'
 	elseif dick < 15 and pcs_throat > dick:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip3.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'With relief you look at his <<$dick_girth>> cock thinking that it''s nothing you can''t handle.'
+		'With relief, you look at his <<$dick_girth>> cock thinking that it''s nothing you can''t handle.'
 	end
 
 	if pcs_throat < dick:
-		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill and you know you wouldn''t be able to swallow it whole.'	
+		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill level and you know you can''t safely swallow it whole.'	
 		act 'Suck the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckTip'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -448,7 +448,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-unzip':
 			act 'Force yourself on his cock (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	else
-		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you''d be able to take it all the way to the balls.'
+		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you could take it all the way to the balls.'
 		act 'Suck the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckTip'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -469,7 +469,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-show':
 	minut += 10
 	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoretease<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You decide to tease the customer by showing him your sexy breasts and jiggle them.'
+	'You decide to tease the customer by showing him your sexy breasts and jiggling them.'
 	'After some time of behaving like a slut, it is obvious that he wants something more.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-unzip'
 end
@@ -481,22 +481,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreblowjobtip<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'You try as best as you can to suck the head of his <<dick>> cm sized <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
 	if pcs_throat < dick:
-		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill and you know you wouldn''t be able to swallow it whole.'	
+		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill level and you know you can''t safely swallow it whole.'	
 	else
-		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you''d be able to take it all the way to the balls.'
+		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you could take it all the way to the balls.'
 	end
 
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>> is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously he''s not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
+			'<<$bName>> is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
 		else
 			'Your customer is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
 		end
 		'Suddenly... without any warning, he takes a step back which pulls his <<$dick_girth>> member out of your mouth.'
-		'With an angry look in his eyes he slaps your face very hard which knocks you to the cold floor.'
-		'He jumps on top of your chest and with a piece of rope he ties you up.'
-		'"Even here, one must train the slaves himself," He shouts at you. He forces his <<$dick_girth>> dick all the way down your throat.'
-		'With your hands tied up you are unable to resist. All you can do is struggle to avoid suffocating as best you can...'
+		'With an angry look in his eyes, he slaps your face very hard, which knocks you to the cold floor.'
+		'He jumps on top of your chest, and with a piece of rope, he ties you up.'
+		'"Even here, one must train the slaves himself" he shouts at you. He forces his <<$dick_girth>> dick all the way down your throat.'
+		'With your hands tied up, you are unable to resist. All you can do is struggle to avoid suffocating as best you can...'
 		act 'Endure':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckForced'
 	elseif $charType = 'neutral':
 		'Your customer seems displeased by your performance. You are starting to worry about what he''ll do if you don''t satisfy him well enough...'
@@ -534,7 +534,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 			end
 		end
 	elseif $charType = 'kind':
-		'Your customer seems pleased by your sucking skills, so you continue to tease the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock. You look at him with as much sensual abandon that you can muster under the present conditions.'
+		'Your customer seems pleased by your sucking skills, so you continue to tease the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock. You look at him with as much sensual abandon as you can muster under the present conditions.'
 		act 'Continue sucking the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuck'
 	end
 end
@@ -545,8 +545,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckForceself':
 	gs 'stat'
 	i = rand(1,3)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreblowjobselfforced<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Knowing you will probably hurt yourself you force yourself on his <<dick>> cm long cock all the way down to be balls deep.'
-	'You start gagging and saliva freely flows from your stuffed mouth. Your customer seems more content now.'
+	'Despite knowing you will probably hurt yourself, you force yourself on his <<dick>> cm long cock all the way down to the balls.'
+	'You start gagging, and saliva freely flows from your stuffed mouth. Your customer seems more content now.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'sub', 'rough', 'deepthroat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuck'
 end
@@ -565,8 +565,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckForced':
 		'Your customer growls and suddenly pulls his cock out of your mouth.'
 	end
 	'"What kind of slave are you when you can''t swallow my <<$dick_girth>> dick?"'
-	'He ties you up and forces his cock down your throat. He shows you little to no concern for your wellbeing.'
-	'You start to gag as he keeps pushing his member deep inside you. Sometimes it leaves you on the brink of passing out.'
+	'He ties you up and forces his cock down your throat. He shows little to no concern for your wellbeing.'
+	'You start to gag as he keeps pushing his member deep inside you. Sometimes this leaves you on the brink of passing out.'
 	vagOrAss = rand (0,1)
 	if buyout = 1:
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough'
@@ -606,9 +606,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuck':
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		*nl
 		'You want to answer him, but the moment you open your mouth to talk he slaps your face very hard. This knocks you down to the cold floor. Tears erupt from your eyes in response.'
-		'"You thought I''m really interested in your slutty opinion," He questionly laughing.'
+		'"You thought I really was interested in your slutty opinion?" He questions, laughing.'
 		'"A whore, and on top of that a slave whore, has no right to have an opinion."'
-		'You are unable to do anything, except whimper like a small child. He ties you up and you know that it''s going to get even worse now.'
+		'You are unable to do anything except whimper like a small child. He ties you up, and you know that it''s going to get even worse now.'
 		vagOrAss = rand (0,1)
 		if vagOrAss = 0:
 			act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckRough'
@@ -678,15 +678,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-beg':
 		endPunishment = 1
 		'A slave has no right to ask what will happen to it!'
 		hardChance = rand(1, 100)
+		'"I will fuck you however I want, so shut up bitch!"'
 		if hardChance <= 50:
-			'"I will fuck you however I want, so shut up bitch!"'
 			if vagOrAss = 0:	
 				act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckRough'
 			else
 				act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough'
 			end
 		else
-			'"I will fuck you however way I want, so shut up."'
 			if vagOrAss = 0:	
 				act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckNormal'
 			else
@@ -769,9 +768,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalDeep':
 	'His member is <<$dick_girth>> and your ass is unable to accommodate it.'
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		*nl
-		'But he doesn''t care about it, even though he is obviously aware, as he fucks you furiously hard.'
+		'But he doesn''t care, even though he is obviously aware, and he fucks you furiously hard.'
 		'"How do like my <<$dick_girth>> cock inside you bitch?"'
-		'"Is it deep enough for you or should I push a bit more?"'
+		'"Is it deep enough for you, or should I push a bit more?"'
 		'Obviously, he''s enjoying this a lot. Doing this is probably the reason he came to this slave house.'
 		*nl
 	end
@@ -803,18 +802,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckNormal':
 	if vagDMG <= 0:
 		'He''s not gentle, but it isn''t a very rough fuck either.'
 		'You have no problems accommodating his <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
-		'For some of the moments you almost seem to enjoy it.'
+		'At some moments, you almost seem to enjoy it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumGate'
 	elseif vagDMG <= 2:
-		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
+		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you, and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'rough'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckDeep'
 	else
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is insanely big for you.'
-		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
+		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix, or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'rough'
@@ -839,16 +838,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckRough':
 			act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumGate'
 		end
 	elseif vagDMG <= 2:
-		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
+		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you, and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'rough'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckDeep'
 	else
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is insanely big for you.'
-		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
-		'He seems to notice it too and realizes why you''re groaning so loudly.'
-		'Enjoying your suffering, he pushes his dick even deeper inside and you squeal like a pig being stuck.'
+		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix, or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
+		'He notice this too, realizing it''s why you''re groaning so loudly.'
+		'Enjoying your suffering, he pushes his dick even deeper inside, and you squeal like a pig.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG * 2
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG * 2
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'rough'
@@ -868,15 +867,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckDeep':
 		*nl
 		'But he doesn''t care about that, even though he is obviously aware of it, and fucks you furiously hard.'
 		'"How do like my <<$dick_girth>> cock inside you bitch?"'
-		'"Is it deep enough for you or should I push a bit more?"'
+		'"Is it deep enough for you, or should I push a bit more?"'
 		'"Do you feel me entering your cervix?"'
 		'Obviously he''s enjoying this a lot. Doing this is probably the reason he came to this slave house.'
 		*nl
 	end
-	'With every stroke of his dick deep inside your vagina you feel as if it''s your very cervix being penetrated.'
+	'With every stroke of his dick deep inside your vagina, you feel as if it''s your very cervix being penetrated.'
 	'A large bulge is noticeable every time he shoves it more than half the way inside you.'
 	*nl
-	'After about half an hour of deep vaginal banging the man is about to cum.'
+	'After about half an hour of deep vaginal banging, the man is about to cum.'
 	
 	if endPunishment = 1 or $charType = 'sadistic':
 		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, unruly fuck slave."'
@@ -963,7 +962,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumPussy':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumpussy<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if vagDMG > 0:
 		'As he delivers his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside your vagina, you can feel the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock at your cervix and even a bit inside it.'
-		'His bursting cum penetrates through the cervix directly into your womb which causes you both pain and a weird warm sensation.'
+		'His bursting cum penetrates through the cervix directly into your womb, which causes you both pain and a weird warm sensation.'
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -978,16 +977,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumPussy':
 	elseif cumVol >= 5:
 		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried very deep inside your pussy, his tip pushes against your cervix and even slides inside of it a bit.'
 		'Then, as he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside you, a lot of it goes directly to your womb.'
-		'It feels painful but the warm sensation is weird and nothing like what you have felt before.'
+		'It feels painful, but the warm sensation is weird and nothing like what you have felt before.'
 		'You feel as if your inner parts are stretching from the <<$cumType>> amount of cum being pumped into you.'
 		*nl
-		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out the lower part of your belly bulges noticably.'
+		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably.'
 		'The customer looks at it with joy then punches at your bulge with his fist.'
 		'The cum bursts out of your pussy as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
 		pain['cervix'] += 20
 		pain['tummy'] += 40
 	else
-		'The customer cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out a small part of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm drips out of your pussy.'
+		'The customer cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small part of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm drips out of your pussy.'
 	end
 
 	pcs_vag += 1
@@ -1002,9 +1001,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumass<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if assDMG > 0:
-		'As he cums inside your anus you can feel the banging of his <<$dick_girth>> cock against your intestinal wall.'
-		'A moving bulge is visible on your otherwise flat stomach as the phallus moves inside you.'
-		'His bursting cum fills you and it seems as if it went backwards up to your very stomach.'
+		'As he cums inside your anus, you can feel the banging of his <<$dick_girth>> cock against your intestinal wall.'
+		'A moving bulge is visible on your otherwise flat stomach as his phallus moves inside you.'
+		'His bursting cum fills you, and it seems as if it went backwards up to your very stomach.'
 		pain['asshole'] += assDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -1012,9 +1011,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 	if cumVol = 3:
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried in your intestines.'
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
+			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
 		else
-			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
+			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
 		end
 		'After his dick is removed, part of the sperm drips out of your gaping hole.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
@@ -1022,24 +1021,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 		if buyout = 1:
 			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside, you can feel your stomach grow larger...'
 		else
-			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside the lower part of your belly bulges noticably...'
+			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside, the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably...'
 		end
 		'You feel very full, even after he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> dick out of you.'
 		'After a few seconds, a large portion of his <<$cumType>> amount of cum spurts out of you as if from a garden hose.'
 	elseif cumVol >= 5:
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>> <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines. With each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
-			'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep in your intestines. With each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
-			*nl
-			'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines with a <<$cumType>> amount of cum.'
+			'<<$bName>>''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
 		else
-			'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep in your intestines. With each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
-			'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines with a <<$cumType>> amount of cum.'
-			*nl
-			'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, the lower part of your belly bulges noticably.'
-			'The customer looks at it with joy then punches at the bulge with his fist.'
-			'The cum burst out of your pussy as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
+			'The customer''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
 		end
+		'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines with a <<$cumType>> amount of cum.'
+		*nl
+		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably.'
+		'He looks at the bulge with joy then punches at it with his fist.'
+		'The cum burst out of your anus as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
 		pain['tummy'] += 20
 		gs 'stat'
 	else
@@ -1074,7 +1070,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumMouth':
 	if throatDMG > 0:
 		'Your aching throat is penetrated again.'
 		'He buries his <<$dick_girth>> cock to the hilt inside you.'
-		'While he''s cumming directly down your gullet you can feel the pulsing of his member. It painfully stretches your already sore throat.'
+		'While he''s cumming directly down your gullet, you can feel the pulsing of his member. It painfully stretches your already sore throat.'
 		pain['throat'] += throatDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -1130,21 +1126,20 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-end':
 	if endPunishment = 1:
-		'The customer goes to the bathroom and your master soon returns to you.'
+		'The customer goes to the bathroom and then calls for your master.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-endPunishment'
 	elseif buyout = 1:
-		'<<$bName>> leaves you lying on the ground. His cum still dripping out of your ass.'
+		'<<$bName>> leaves you lying on the ground, his cum still dripping out of your ass, and calls for your master.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-endPunishment'
 	else
-		'The customer goes to the bathroom and you are immediately lead back to the basement.'
+		'The customer goes to the bathroom, and you are immediately lead back to the basement.'
 		act 'Go back':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-endPunishment':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/kneelingslave1.jpg"></center>'
-	'After the customer is done with you, he calls for your master.'
-	'He tells your master how unruly you were and that further training should be applied to you.'
+	iif(buyout = 1, $bName, 'The customer') + ' tells your master how unruly you were and that further training should be applied to you.'
 	'He then leaves.'
 	'Kneeling, you look up at your master only to see his grim face. You can tell something bad will happen.'
 	act 'Be led back to the basement':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomer'