[text edit] clean up seeporn

locations/seeporn.qsrc

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 
 *clr & cla
 '<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/tv/seeporn.mp4"></video></center>'
-'You and the boys sit down around the TV, Kolka puts on a DVD and immediately the screen is filled with porn.'
+'You and the boys sit down around the TV. Kolka puts on a DVD, and immediately, the screen is filled with porn.'
 see_rand1 = rand(0,100)
 act 'Watch it':
 	cla
@@ -15,18 +15,18 @@ act 'Watch it':
 	if evgenQW >= 4 and pav_slut >= 150: gt 'seeporn','SeePornPalevo'
 
 	if seepornofut < 3:
-		'The boys are looking at what is going on the screen but they are clearly uneasy and embarrassed with you here.'
+		'The boys are looking at what is going on on the screen, but they are clearly uneasy and embarrassed with you here.'
 	elseif seepornofut >= 3 and seepornofut < 10:
 		'The guys have become accustomed to watching porn with you about, sometimes even commenting on what is happening.'
 	elseif seepornofut >= 10:
-		'The boys intensely watch the porn, you notice a distinct tightness in their pants.'
+		'The boys intensely watch the porn. You notice a distinct tightness in their pants.'
 
 		if evgenQW = 4:
 			*clr & cla
 			boyseeporn += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/tv/seeporn.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice that they are all clearly aroused. Zhendos asks "<<$pcs_nickname>>, Want to put that mouth of yours to use?"'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice that they are all clearly aroused. Zhendos asks, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, want to put that mouth of yours to use?"'
 
 			act 'Keep quiet':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -67,7 +67,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbbcum.jpg"></center>'
-					'The boys don''t last long and cum right in your face, Soon almost all of your face is covered in a layer of sperm and it''s dripping onto your clothes.'
+					'The boys don''t last long and cum right in your face. Soon, almost all of your face is covered in a layer of sperm, and it''s dripping onto your clothes.'
 
 					evgenrand = rand(1,5)
 
@@ -84,8 +84,8 @@ act 'Watch it':
 
 						gs 'stat'
 						'Kolka tells the guys that he should take you home.'
-						'As soon as you leave the school building your brother whispers; "Let''s look for a quiet place, I''m still horny."'
-						'Soon you find a secluded spot and Kolka says, "This looks good. Bend over."'
+						'As soon as you leave the school building, your brother whispers, "Let''s look for a quiet place, I''m still horny."'
+						'Soon, you find a secluded spot, and Kolka says, "This looks good. Bend over."'
 						if see_rand1 < 5:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/public/boysex.jpg"></center>'
 						if see_rand1 >= 5 and see_rand1 < 30:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/public/publ1,<<rand(0,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 						if see_rand1 >= 30:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/public/publ1,<<rand(0,6)>>.jpg"></center>'
@@ -119,7 +119,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/seeporn.jpg"></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice the bulges in their pants. Zhendos suddenly takes your hand and holds it against his groin, Mishan does the same with your other hand. Your brother Kolka laughs nervously. Mishan tells you conspiratorially "<<$pcs_nickname>>, wank us off."'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice the bulges in their pants. Zhendos suddenly takes your hand and holds it against his groin, and Mishan does the same with your other hand. Your brother Kolka laughs nervously. Mishan tells you conspiratorially, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, wank us off."'
 
 			act 'Jerk guys':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -132,7 +132,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 
 				if boyseeporn < 2:
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporn.hand1,<<rand(0,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'They get their cocks out and you gently rub both members with your hands, Zhendos quickly groans and lets fly a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately followed by Mishan who also manages to hit your foot.'
+					'They get their cocks out, and you gently rub both members with your hands. Zhendos quickly groans and lets fly a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately followed by Mishan, who also manages to hit your foot.'
 
 					act 'Eew':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -146,7 +146,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporncumhj.jpg"></center>'
-						'You shout "You assholes, all over my feet!" But the boys are blissfully sprawled on the couch "Great handjob <<$pcs_nickname>>, such small, soft hands."'
+						'You shout, "You assholes, all over my feet!" but the boys are blissfully sprawled on the couch. "Great handjob <<$pcs_nickname>>, such small, soft hands."'
 
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 					end
@@ -154,7 +154,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 					evgenQW = 4
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornfirst.jpg"></center>'
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbro0,<<rand(0,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'They get their cocks out and you gently rub both members with your hands, your brother Kolka walks over, his eyes filled with lust and puts his dick in your mouth. You eyes widened at this turn of events. Zhendos quickly groans and from his cock flys a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately followed by Mishan who also manages to hit your foot.'
+					'They get their cocks out, and you gently rub both members with your hands. Your brother Kolka walks over, his eyes filled with lust, and puts his dick in your mouth. Your eyes widen at this turn of events. Zhendos quickly groans, and from his cock flies a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately followed by one from Mishan, who also manages to hit your foot.'
 
 					act '"Groo gaskers!"':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -177,9 +177,9 @@ act 'Watch it':
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/facial22.jpg"></center>'
-						'Suddenly, your brother takes his dick out of your mouth a jet of hot cum splatters across your face.'
+						'Suddenly, your brother takes his dick out of your mouth, and a jet of hot cum splatters across your face.'
 						'Mishan laughs, "Kolka, you just fucked your sister in the mouth!"'
-						'Kolka wipes the sweat from his forehead, "Holy shit, I don''t fucking believe it! The slut was asking for it! No man could have resisted!"'
+						'Kolka wipes the sweat from his forehead. "Holy shit, I don''t fucking believe it! The slut was asking for it! No man could have resisted!"'
 						
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 					end
@@ -203,13 +203,13 @@ act 'Watch it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/seeporn.jpg"></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice the bulges in their pants. Zhendos suddenly takes your hand and holds it against his groin, Mishan does the same with your other hand. Your brother Kolka laughs nervously. Mishan Says conspiratorially "<<$pcs_nickname>>, wank us off."'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice the bulges in their pants. Zhendos suddenly takes your hand and holds it against his groin, and Mishan does the same with your other hand. Your brother Kolka laughs nervously. Mishan says conspiratorially, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, wank us off."'
 
 			act 'What the fuck?':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/seeporn.jpg"></center>'
-				'You shake your head. Mishan says "Come on, you''re a girl, it''s something good friends do for each other."'
+				'You shake your head. Mishan says, "Come on, you''re a girl, it''s something good friends do for each other."'
 				act 'Jerk them':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'arousal', 'hj', 10, 'group', 'sub'
@@ -219,7 +219,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 					evgenQW = 3
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/doublehj.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'They get there cocks out and you gently rub both members with your hands, Zhendos quickly groaned and his cock flew jet of sperm on your foot, immediately joined by Mishan and also finished on your foot.'
+					'They get there cocks out and you gently rub both members with your hands. Zhendos quickly groans, and his cock lets fly a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately joined by one from Mishan, who also finishes on your foot.'
 
 					act 'Resent':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -233,7 +233,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporncumhj.jpg"></center>'
-						'You shout "You assholes, all over my feet!" But the boys are blissfully sprawled on the couch "Great handjob <<$pcs_nickname>>, such small, soft hands."'
+						'You shout, "You assholes, all over my feet!" but the boys are blissfully sprawled on the couch. "Great handjob <<$pcs_nickname>>, such small, soft hands."'
 
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 					end
@@ -257,8 +257,8 @@ act 'Watch it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/assgrab.jpg"></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice, their boners straining to get out of their pants.'
-			'You feel Zhendos hand gently stroking your ass.'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice their boners straining to get out of their pants.'
+			'You feel Zhendos''s hand gently stroking your ass.'
 
 			gs 'willpower', 'foreplay', 'resist', 'medium'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -267,7 +267,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/fuckoff2.jpg"></center>'
-					'You angrily remove Zhendos hand from your ass.'
+					'You angrily remove Zhendos''s hand from your ass.'
 					act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 				end
 			else
@@ -280,7 +280,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/assgrab.jpg"></center>'
-				'You sit on the couch turning red as a lobster enjoying having your butt rubbed.'
+				'You sit on the couch turning red as a lobster, enjoying having your butt rubbed.'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 			end
@@ -290,8 +290,8 @@ act 'Watch it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/tv/seeporn.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice, their boners straining to get out of their pants.'
-			'Zhendos looking at the porn asks you "Have you ever done that, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice, their boners straining to get out of their pants.'
+			'Zhendos, looking at the porn, asks you, "Have you ever done that, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 
 			gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'medium'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -311,7 +311,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 				evgenQW = 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/seeporn_umm.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You swallow and remain silent watching the porn. Mishan chuckles "And now she''s all flushed. It turns out the girls like porn as well."'
+				'You swallow and remain silent, watching the porn. Mishan chuckles, "And now she''s all flushed. It turns out the girls like porn as well."'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 			end
@@ -329,7 +329,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 	bratrand = RAND(0,1)
 	!boyseeporn += 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/tv/seeporn.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'The boys watch porn and whisper to each other, casting lustful glances at you'
+	'The boys watch porn and whisper to each other, casting lustful glances at you.'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	if bratrand = 0:
@@ -337,7 +337,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 		boyseeporn += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 
-		'Zhendos suggests "<<$pcs_nickname>>, How about putting that mouth to work? Kolka told us how you entertained the guys in the park so there''s no need to act all innocent. Unless of course you want everyone to know."'
+		'Zhendos suggests, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, how about putting that mouth to work? Kolka told us how you entertained the guys in the park, so there''s no need to act all innocent. Unless of course, you want everyone to know."'
 
 		act 'Say nothing':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -345,8 +345,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 
 			if see_rand1 < 30:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornblowbang.jpg"></center>'
 			if see_rand1 >= 30:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbro0,<<rand(0,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'Your silence is taken as consent, Zhendos gets his dick out and pulls your face toward it, you dutifully wrapped your lips around it and began to suck.'
-			'Your brother Kolka and Mishan also get their members out and stand around you, you start to masturbate and suck dick. You find the unusual and awkward situation a little exciting.'
+			'Your silence is taken as consent. Zhendos gets his dick out and pulls your face toward it, and you dutifully wrap your lips around it and begin to suck.'
+			'Your brother Kolka and Mishan also get their members out and stand around you. You start to masturbate and suck dick. You find the unusual and awkward situation a little exciting.'
 
 			act 'Suck':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -384,7 +384,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 				gs 'stat'
 
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbbcum.jpg"></center>'
-				'The boys don''t last long and cum right in your face, Soon almost all of your face is covered in a layer of sperm and it''s dripping on to your clothes. The boys laugh "That''s right, good girl".'
+				'The boys don''t last long and cum right in your face. Soon, almost all of your face is covered in a layer of sperm, and it''s dripping onto your clothes. The boys laugh, "That''s right, good girl".'
 
 				act 'Escape':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 			end
@@ -394,14 +394,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 			*clr & cla
 			BrotherNo = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/fuckoff2.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Fuck off, who would believe you." Your brother looks at you then says to Zhendos "Better luck next time."'
+			'"Fuck off, who would believe you." Your brother looks at you then says to Zhendos, "Better luck next time."'
 
 			act 'Escape':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 		end
 	elseif bratrand = 1:
 
 		'Zhendos suggests, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, are you going to serve us like you did with the kids in the park? Want to see if you can take two cocks in your mouth?"'
-		'You realise, your brother could not resist and told his friends. Hopefully only them.'
+		'You realise your brother could not resist and told his friends. Hopefully only them.'
 
 		act 'You can manage two little ones':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -409,7 +409,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporndouble.jpg"></center>'
 			'You dutifully kneel in front of the guys, grab their hard dicks and start to push them into your mouth.'
-			'"I told you that she would take it in the mouth like a pro, and you didn''t believe me", your brother laughs.'
+			'"I told you that she would take it in the mouth like a pro, and you didn''t believe me," your brother laughs.'
 
 			act 'Suck':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -418,7 +418,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporndouble2.jpg"></center>'
 				'You diligently continue to suck two dicks at the same time, the guys moaning and moving their hips trying to shove them into you deeper.'
 				'Your brother is looking at you closely and with his hand down his pants, while loudly telling details about what a dirty whore you are.'
-				'Just as you feel that this situation is beginning to slow you. You unzip your brothers pants and start alternate between his cock on its own and both of his friends at the same time.'
+				'Just as you feel that this situation is beginning to slow, you unzip your brother''s pants and start alternate between his cock on its own and both of his friends at the same time.'
 				'The boys don''t last long and almost simultaneously finish on your face. Seen too much damn porn, juvenile perverts.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'group', 'incest', 'sub'
 
@@ -446,9 +446,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbjcum<<rand(2,3)>>.jpg"></center>'
-					'Doing nothing but close your eyes, you sit humbly on your knees, without disturbing them while they cum. Then it hits you, the pungent smell of sperm.'
-					'You feel like a hot sticky goo covers your entire face, individual droplets fall on to your neck and hair.'
-					'"This is for you, instead of face masks", laugh the boys. Real funny, you wipe your eyes and angrily stare at them.'
+					'Doing nothing but close your eyes, you sit humbly on your knees without disturbing them while they cum. Then it hits you, the pungent smell of sperm.'
+					'You feel like a hot sticky goo covers your entire face, individual droplets falling onto your neck and hair.'
+					'"This is for you, instead of face masks," laugh the boys.'
+					'"Real funny." You wipe your eyes and angrily stare at them.'
 
 					act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 				end
@@ -462,7 +463,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 				BrotherNo = 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/disgust.jpg"></center>'
-				'You indignantly reject the kids. Your brother looks at you and announces "Probably for the best, your tiny peckers would only count as one cock."'
+				'You indignantly reject the kids. Your brother looks at you and announces, "Probably for the best, your tiny peckers would only count as one cock."'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 			end