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Cleaned up text in city industrial area

Vengeance11 3 years ago
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3 changed files with 48 additions and 48 deletions
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  1. 26 26
      locations/autosalonF.qsrc
  2. 13 13
      locations/autotraidF.qsrc
  3. 9 9
      locations/city_industrial.qsrc

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locations/autosalonF.qsrc
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@@ -12,7 +12,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	'<center><b>Car Dealership</b></center>'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/cardealer/manager.jpg"></center>'
 
 	nl
 
-	'<b><center>List of Vehicles for Sale</center></b>'
 
+	'<b><center>List of vehicles for sale</center></b>'
 
 	nl
 
 	'<center><table border=0><TR>'
 
 	'<TR><TD><a href="exec:GS ''carF1'',''car6''">Kalina VAZ</a>.</TD><TD> - </TD><TD> New. Price: 400 th.RUB</TD></TR>'
 
@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/cardealer/manager.jpg"></center>'
 
 	'You have <<karta>> <b>₽</b> on your bank account.'
 
 	'The manager smiles affably and explains routinely what is required to purchase a car: A driver''s license and the sum, in full, on your bank account.' 
-	'"With how the economy is right now, we can''t accept payment by installments at this time, I''m afraid", he apologizes, "and a few new laws have been passed, too: We cannot accept cash payment - the Duma believes that will help fight crime - and it is currently not possible to own more than one car, according to the Oblast''s new anti-corruption law.'
 
+	'"With how the economy is right now, we can''t accept payment by installments at this time I''m afraid." he apologizes. "A few new laws have also been passed too: We cannot accept cash payment - the Duma believes that will help fight crime - and it is currently not possible to own more than one car, according to the Oblast''s new anti-corruption law.'
 
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'city_industrial'
 
 
@@ -78,7 +78,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -99,7 +99,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -120,7 +120,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -141,7 +141,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -162,7 +162,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -183,7 +183,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -204,7 +204,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -225,7 +225,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -246,7 +246,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -267,7 +267,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -288,7 +288,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -309,7 +309,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -330,7 +330,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -351,7 +351,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -372,7 +372,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -393,7 +393,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -414,7 +414,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -435,7 +435,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -456,7 +456,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -477,7 +477,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -498,7 +498,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -519,7 +519,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -540,7 +540,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
@@ -561,7 +561,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			wrek = 0
 
 
 			'The manager draws up a purchasing contract and you inform the bank of the impending transaction. Once the bank has confirmed the write-off, the manager hands you the key to your new car.' 
-			'"It''s waiting for you outside", she says. "The fuel tank is almost empty, though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
+			'"It''s waiting for you outside." he says. "The fuel tank is almost empty though, so you should stop by the gas station right away."'
 
 
 			act 'Leave':gt'city_industrial'
 
 		end

+ 13 - 13
locations/autotraidF.qsrc
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@@ -50,14 +50,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 			minut += 60
 
 			money += bupay
 
 			car = 0
 
-			'While you are almost certain that he''s offering less than the car is actually worth, you doubt that you''re gonna find somebody who''s gonna offer you more for it and your attempts at haggling with the fence fall flat - he''s just too experienced at this.'
 
+			'While you are almost certain that he''s offering less than the car is actually worth, you doubt that you''re going find somebody who''s going to offer you more for it and your attempts at haggling with the fence fall flat - he''s just too experienced at this.'
 
 			'So, as much as you hate it, you give your car one last look before you shake hands with him and follow him into the tiny shed he calls his "office" to sign the papers. He hands you the money in cash and, with a nasty grin, suggests that you look around the yard.' 
-			'"Maybe you see something you like."'
 
+			'"Maybe you''ll see something you like?"'
 
 
 			act 'Leave': killvar 'bupay' & minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial'
 
 		end
 
 	elseif cardrive ! 9:
 
-		'The salesman tells you, his smile sneering rather than friendly, that he needs to look at you car before he can tell you how much it''s worth. "But if you want, I can have somebody tow it here. It only costs 3000 <b>₽</b>. Very cheap!"'
 
+		'The salesman tells you, his smile sneering rather than friendly, that he needs to look at your car before he can tell you how much it''s worth. "If you want, I can have somebody tow it here. It only costs 3000 <b>₽</b>. Very cheap!"'
 
 
 		if money >= 3000:
 
 			act 'Pay for towing service to the car market (3,000 <b>₽</b>) (1:00)':
 
@@ -66,7 +66,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'manager1':
 
 				minut += 60
 
 				cardrive = 9
 
 				money -= 3000
 
-				'You give him the money - certain that he''s ripping you off - and wait for an hour until the tow truck finally drives into the yard and your car.'
 
+				'You give him the money - certain that he''s ripping you off - and wait for an hour until the tow truck finally drives into the yard, your car hooked up to the rear of it.'
 
 
 				act 'Talk to the car salesman again': killvar 'bupay' & gt 'autotraidF', 'manager1'
 
 			end
 
@@ -86,7 +86,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	'<center><b>Used Car Dealership</b></center>'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/industrial/usedcar/autotraid.jpg"></center>'
 
-	'There are so many cars on the parking lot that you could spend a lifetime looking around without ever seeing all of them. And according to the salesman, several cars are currently being test-driven or maintained. You doubt that there''s actually any maintenance going on, though: Several of the cars are visibly damaged or make awful sounds when they are started.' 
+	'There are so many cars on the parking lot that you could spend a lifetime looking around without ever seeing all of them. According to the salesman, several cars are currently being test-driven or maintained. You doubt that there''s actually any maintenance going on though: Several of the cars are visibly damaged or make awful sounds when they are started.' 
 	*nl
 
 	'It''s obvious that most, if not all of them have sustained some visible or invisible damage. Buying a car here could be a fantastic bargain... or a complete waste of money. If you are to buy any of them, you know that the first place to visit should be a service center.'
 
 
@@ -117,7 +117,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 					teh = tehT
 
 					tehcar = 200
 
 					wrek = 0
 
-					'You agree. Before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents, you hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
+					'You agree and before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents. You hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
 					'Since it''s crammed in between about a million other vehicles, the car salesman moves it outside near the yard''s entrance for you and warns you that there is very little gas in the tank.'
 
 					killvar 'bupay' & killvar 'tehT'
 
 					act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial'
 
@@ -147,7 +147,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 					tehcar = 200
 
 					teh = rand(10, tehcar)
 
 					wrek = 1
 
-					'You agree. Before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents, you hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
+					'You agree and before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents. You hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
 					'Since it''s crammed in between about a million other vehicles, the car salesman moves it outside near the yard''s entrance for you... and that''s it.' 
 					'If you want to get the car to a garage, you''ll have to go there and have it towed.'
 
 					killvar 'bupay'
 
@@ -179,7 +179,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 					teh = tehT
 
 					tehcar = 300
 
 					wrek = 0
 
-					'You agree. Before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents, you hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
+					'You agree and before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents. You hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
 					'Since it''s crammed in between about a million other vehicles, the car salesman moves it outside near the yard''s entrance for you and warns you that there is very little gas in the tank.'
 
 					killvar 'bupay' & killvar 'tehT'
 
 					act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt'city_industrial'
 
@@ -210,7 +210,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 					teh = tehT
 
 					tehcar = 290
 
 					wrek = 0
 
-					'You agree. Before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents, you hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
+					'You agree and before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents. You hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
 					'Since it''s crammed in between about a million other vehicles, the car salesman moves it outside near the yard''s entrance for you and warns you that there is very little gas in the tank.'
 
 					killvar 'bupay' & killvar 'tehT'
 
 					act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt'city_industrial'
 
@@ -241,7 +241,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 					teh = tehT
 
 					tehcar = 300
 
 					wrek = 0
 
-					'You agree. Before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents, you hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
+					'You agree and before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents. You hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
 					'Since it''s crammed in between about a million other vehicles, the car salesman moves it outside near the yard''s entrance for you and warns you that there is very little gas in the tank.'
 
 					killvar 'bupay' & killvar 'tehT'
 
 					act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt'city_industrial'
 
@@ -272,7 +272,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 					teh = tehT
 
 					tehcar = 350
 
 					wrek = 0
 
-					'You agree. Before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents, you hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
+					'You agree and before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents. You hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
 					'Since it''s crammed in between about a million other vehicles, the car salesman moves it outside near the yard''s entrance for you and warns you that there is very little gas in the tank.'
 
 					killvar 'bupay' & killvar 'tehT'
 
 					act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt'city_industrial'
 
@@ -304,7 +304,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 					teh = tehT
 
 					tehcar = 1000
 
 					wrek = 0
 
-					'You agree. Before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents, you hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
+					'You agree and before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents. You hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
 					'Since it''s crammed in between about a million other vehicles, the car salesman moves it outside near the yard''s entrance for you and warns you that there is very little gas in the tank.'
 
 					killvar 'bupay' & killvar 'tehT'
 
 					act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial'
 
@@ -336,7 +336,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'car':
 
 					teh = tehT
 
 					tehcar = 800
 
 					wrek = 0
 
-					'You agree. Before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents, you hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
+					'You agree and before you know it, the car salesman and you have signed all the necessary documents. You hand over the <<bupay>> <b>₽</b> in cash and the car is yours.' 
 					'Since it''s crammed in between about a million other vehicles, the car salesman moves it outside near the yard''s entrance for you and warns you that there is very little gas in the tank.'
 
 					killvar 'bupay' & killvar 'tehT'
 
 					act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial'

+ 9 - 9
locations/city_industrial.qsrc
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@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 
 
 	if car > 0 and cardrive = 3 or (cardrive >= 6 and cardrive <= 9):'In the parking stands your <a href="exec:GS ''carF'', ''start''"><<$car>></a>.'
 
 
-	'The towns <a href="exec:minut += 60 & gt ''city_park'', ''start''">central park</a> is an hours walk from here.'
 
+	'The town''s <a href="exec:minut += 60 & gt ''city_park'', ''start''">central park</a> is a one hour walk from here.'
 
 
 	if hour > 7 and hour < 23:
 
 		'You can see the <a href="exec:$loc = ''city_industrial'' & minut += 1 & gt ''kiosk'', ''start''">kiosk</a> selling cigarettes and magazines.'
 
@@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 
 	'At the center of the industrial region is a <a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''city_industrial_train'', ''outside''">train station</a>.'
 
 
 	if week = 3 or hour < 16:
 
-		'The Bar "Rabotnik" is here, but it seems to be closed. A sign by the door tells you that it''s open every day (except Wednesday) between 16:00 and 24:00.'
 
+		'The "Rabotnik" bar is here, but it seems to be closed. A sign by the door tells you that it''s open every day (except Wednesday) between 16:00 and midnight..'
 
 	else
 
 		'The <a href="exec: minut += 5 & gt ''qwBarPolet''">Bar "Rabotnik"</a> seems to be open.'
 
 	end
 
@@ -78,12 +78,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 
 	if hour >= 9 and hour < 18 and week > 1:
 
 		'A <a href="exec: minut += 5 & gt ''autotraidF'', ''start''">car dealership</a> is nearby.'
 
 	else
 
-		'A car dealership is nearby'+iif(week = 1, ', but it''s closed on mondays.', '. It''s currently closed and will open between 09:00 and 18:00.')
 
+		'A car dealership is nearby'+iif(week = 1, ', but it''s closed on Mondays.', '. It''s currently closed and will open between 09:00 and 18:00.')
 
 	end
 
 	if hour >= 9 and hour <= 20 and week < 7:
 
 		'Next to the car dealership is a <a href="exec: minut += 5 & gt ''autoservisF'', ''start''">repair shop</a>.'
 
 	else
 
-		'Next to the car dealership is a repair shop.'+ iif(week = 7, 'It''s closed on sundays.', 'It will be open between 09:00 and 20:00.')
 
+		'Next to the car dealership is a repair shop.'+ iif(week = 7, 'It''s closed on Sundays.', 'It will be open between 09:00 and 20:00.')
 
 	end
 
 	if hour >= 9 and hour < 17 and week < 6:
 
 		'The <a href="exec: minut += 5 & gt ''dk'', ''start''">community centre</a> is currently open.'
 
@@ -99,7 +99,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 
 	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 20:
 
 		'The parking lot, which is engulfed in bright lights, belongs to a <a href="exec: minut += 2 & gt ''shop'', ''start''">supermarket</a>.'
 
 	else
 
-		'The empty parking lot, which is engulfed in bright lights, belongs to a supermarket that opens between 08:00 and 20:00'
 
+		'The empty parking lot, which is engulfed in bright lights, belongs to a supermarket that is open between 08:00 and 20:00'
 
 	end
 
 	if hour >= 12 and hour <= 19:
 
 		'Above the door to a basement room is a bright neon sign for the <a href="exec: minut += 5 & gt ''pirsingsalon'', ''start''">Tattoo & Piercing parlor</a>.'
 
@@ -149,14 +149,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'redlight':
 
 		'The <a href="exec:msg ''The Strip Club is closed for the day and will reopen at 18:00''">Strip Clubs</a> red lights, attracting men from all over the city.'
 
 	end
 
 	if pornstudio >= 1 and hour >= 10 and hour < 22:
 
-		'At the <a href="exec:gt ''pornstudio'', ''start''">Porn Studio</a>, where a variety of naughty movies are created'
 
+		'At the <a href="exec:gt ''pornstudio'', ''start''">Porn Studio</a>, where a variety of adult movies are created.'
 
 	elseif pornstudio >= 1 and (hour < 10 or hour >= 22):
 
-		'At the <a href="exec:msg ''The Porn Studio is closed for the day and will reopen at 10:00''">Porn Studio</a>, where a variety of naughty movies are created'
 
+		'At the <a href="exec:msg ''The Porn Studio is closed for the day and will reopen at 10:00''">Porn Studio</a>, where a variety of adult movies are created.'
 
 	end
 
 	if hour < 3 or hour >= 11: 
-		'A shop for <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''sexshop'', ''start''">Sex Toys</a> is open for perverts from all around the city.'
 
+		'A shop for <a href="exec:minut += 5 & gt ''sexshop'', ''start''">Sex Toys</a> is open for perverts from all around the city to browse its stock.'
 
 	else
 
-		'A shop for sex toys is closed and will open at 11:00.'
 
+		'A shop that sells sex toys. It is currently closed and will open at 11:00.'
 
 	end
 
 	if bordel > 0 and (hour >= 20 or hour <= 3):'Inside the courtyard is the entrance to the <a href="exec:gt ''bordel''">brothel</a>.'