- Migrated Lariska quest variables into an array

- Added event for Albina to help out with Lina
- Cleaned up text

locations/LariskaStart.qsrc

@@ -30,9 +30,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		'You are best friends.'
 	end
 	''
-	'As you leave the sports section, you notice Lariska Gruzdev nervously looking for someone. Her gaze stops on you and she waves her hand, calling you over to her.'
-	'Well this is interesting, she has never shown that much interest in you before, always stuck in Christina''s stranglehold and so distant that you could barely get a full sentence from her.'
-	'Now that you have beaten Christina, she suddenly wants to talk. She does look more confident, happier and more active. Maybe she wants to thank you for beating up the bully?'
+	'As you leave the sports section, you notice Lariska nervously looking for someone. Her gaze stops on you and she waves her hand, calling you over to her.'
+	'Well this is interesting, she has never shown that much interest in you before. She always seems to be stuck in Christina''s stranglehold and so distant that you could barely get a full sentence from her.'
+	'Now that you''ve beaten Christina, she suddenly wants to talk. She does look more confident, happier and more active. Maybe she wants to thank you for beating up the bully?'
 	
 	act 'Leave':gt'pav_commcenter'
 	act 'Follow Lariska':
@@ -47,45 +47,45 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			gs'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/lariska/sex/fight/start_1.jpg"></center>'
 			'You quickly recover and now you can see that it is Lariska who is pushing you against the wall. Her face is so close to yours that you start blushing and become aroused.'
-			'Then the penny drops that she is not excited, but frightened. She is shuddering with fear and is looking around fearfully that somebody spotted you.'
+			'Then the penny drops that she is not excited, but frightened. She is shuddering with fear and is looking around, fearful that somebody spotted you.'
 			'Her nose is touching your face as she is turns her head from side to side. You can''t help wanting to hug her to calm her down. You touch her gently and put your arms on her shoulders and ask:'
-			'"Lariska, what happened? How can I help?"'
+			'"Lariska, what''s wrong?""'
 			act 'Soothe her':
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				gs'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/lariska/sex/fight/start_3.jpg"></center>'
-				'"<<$pcs_nickname>> ..." Lariska says and pauses.'
-				'You hug her tighter and stroke her back gently. "What, Lariska?"'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>> ..." she says and pauses.'
+				'You hug her tighter and stroke her back gently. "What is it Lariska?"'
 				'After calming down a little, Lariska takes a deep breath and starts talking quickly:'
-				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you are in danger! Zvereva wants to set junkies on you .. "'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you are in danger! Christina wants to set junkies on you!"'
 				'You are totally numb now. "What junkies?"'
-				'"Well, she didn''t only give blow jobs to the trainer, but she also blew the junkies who sell drugs here. She bought some super steroids and wants to contaminate you with them! Tomorrow after the section, they want to catch and rape you!"'
-				'As soon as she said that she ran away.'
+				'"Well, she didn''t just give blowjobs to the trainer, but she also blew the junkies who sell drugs here. She bought some super steroids and wants to contaminate you with them! They want to catch and rape you tomorrow!"'
+				'As soon as she says this, she runs away.'
 
 				if kotovLoveQW > 0:
-					act 'Call Kotov':
+					act 'Call Vitek':
 						cls
 						minut += 5
 						gs'stat'
+                        'You pull out your phone and dial Vitek''s number.'
+						'"Hi Vitek. Listen, you said that you can protect me from anybody. I need you help now! Christina is going to dig a pit on me tomorrow. She wants to have her dealers rape me."'
+						'"That bitch! Don''t worry, I know these bastards. Dimka gets his dope from them. Nobody is dangerous, at least for me anyway! Don''t worry about anything!"'
 
-						'"Hi Vitek. Listen, you said that you can protect me from anybody. I need you help now! Zvereva is going to dig a pit on me tomorrow. She wants to have her dealers rape me."'
-						'"That bitch! Don''t worry, I know these bastards, Nosov gets his dope from them. Nobody is dangerous, for me anyway! Don''t worry about anything!"'
-
-						KotovZverHelp = 1
+						LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = 1
 						act 'Leave':gt'pav_commcenter'
 					end
 				end
 				if IvanShowerQW >= 10 and npc_rel['A3'] >= 60:
-					act 'Call Prokhorov':
+					act 'Call Ivan':
 						cls
 						minut += 5
 						gs'stat'
-
-						'"Hey Ivan, listen, some perverts are badgering me here, could you escort me home after section tomorrow?"'
+                        'You pull out your phone and dial Ivan''s number.'
+						'"Hey Ivan. Listen, some perverts are badgering me here, could you escort me home after practice tomorrow?"'
 						'"Sure, no problem <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 
-						IvanZverHelp = 1
+						LariskaQW['IvanHelp'] = 1
 						act 'Leave':gt'pav_commcenter'
 					end
 				end
@@ -94,11 +94,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						cls
 						minut += 5
 						gs'stat'
-
-						'"Hi Albina, could you help me? I will make it up to you."'
+                        'You pull out your phone and dial Albina''s number.'
+						'"Hey Albina, can you help me? I will make it up to you."'
 						'"What happened?"'
-						'"Zvereva set junkies on me."'
-						'"Okay, don''t be afraid. I''ve got contacts, I''ll call right now, she''ll go away empty-handed."'
+						'"Christina set junkies on me."'
+						'"I''ll sort it." is all she says before she abruptly hangs up.'
 
 						AlbinaQW['ChristinaHelp'] = 1
 
@@ -107,16 +107,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				end
 
 				if fedorKozlovQW = -15 or fedorKozlovQW >= 10:
-					act 'Call Fyodor':
+					act 'Call Fedor':
 						cls
 						minut += 5
 						gs'stat'
-
-						'"Fedor, I need your help, Christina has paid off some steroid pumping punks to rape me outside the sports center tomorrow, can you please help me?"'
+                        'You pull out your phone and dial Fedor''s number'
+						'"Fedor, I need your help. Christina has paid off some steroid pumping punks to rape me outside the sports center tomorrow. Can you please help me?"'
 						'"There is no way I''m letting them hurt you. I will wait for you outside the center and do everything in my power to keep you safe."'
-						'"Thank you Fyodor, I knew I could count on you."'
+						'"Thanks Fedor. I knew I could count on you."'
 
-						FyodorZverHelp = 1
+						LariskaQW['FedorHelp'] = 1
 
 						act 'Leave':gt'pav_commcenter'
 					end
@@ -126,13 +126,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			end
 		end
 		if razradKik >= 2 and pcs_stren >= 55:
-			act 'Attack':
+			act 'Attack them':
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				gs'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/lariska/sex/fight/start_2.jpg"></center>'
-				'You grab the enemy''s hands, pin him to the wall, and hit his stomach with all your might. A cry of pain flies from your opponent''s mouth.'
-				act 'Look at the enemy':
+				'You grab their hands, pin them to the wall, and hit them in the stomach with all your might. A female cry of pain flies from their mouth.'
+				act 'Look at them':
 					cls
 					minut += 5
 					gs'stat'
@@ -142,15 +142,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big13.jpg"></center>'
 					'<<$npc_notes[''A13'']>>'
 
-					if npc_grupTipe['A13'] = 5:'<<$npc_firstname[''A13'']>> belongs to a group of outcasts.'
-					if npc_grupTipe['A13'] = 2:'<<$npc_firstname[''A13'']>> belongs to a group of sportsmen.'
+					if npc_grupTipe['A13'] = 5:'<<$npc_firstname[''A13'']>> is an outcast.'
+					if npc_grupTipe['A13'] = 2:'<<$npc_firstname[''A13'']>> is one of the jocks.'
 
 					if npc_rel['A13'] < 20:'You have a bad relationship.'
 					''
-					'Right after hitting them in the stomach you realize that it''s Lariska who is in front of you with tears in her eyes. You unclinch her immediately and as soon as you do she starts yelling into your face:'
-					'"Idiot, I wanted to help you!" and she pushes you back and runs away.'
-					'You stand still for a few minutes, suprised, and think that you should apologize to her at school tomorrow, before finally going home.'
-					lariskaHelp = -1
+					'Right after hitting them in the stomach, you realize that it''s Lariska who is in front of you with tears in her eyes. You release her from your grip and as soon as you do she starts yelling in your face.'
+					'"I wanted to help you, you idiot!" she screams before pushing you back and running away in tears.'
+					'You stand still for a few minutes, surprised, and think that you should apologize to her at school tomorrow, before finally going home.'
+					LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = -1
 
 					act 'Leave':gt'pav_commcenter'
 				end
@@ -163,7 +163,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	cls
 	minut += 5
 	gs'stat'
-	if IvanZverHelp = 1:
+	if LariskaQW['IvanHelp'] = 1:
 		numnpc = 3
 
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon><<$npc_firstname[''A3'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A3'']>></font></b></center>'
@@ -185,7 +185,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 		end
 		''
 		pcs_horny += 10
-		'You meet Ivan Prokhorov in front of gym entrance.'
+		'You meet Ivan in front of the gym entrance.'
 		'He is standing there waiting for you and when he spots you, he smiles.'
 		'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>!" He greets you and you unwittingly remember the incident in the shower.'
 		'He takes your bag in his hand together with his own bag and puts the other hand on your arm and he leads you to the exit.'
@@ -195,10 +195,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 			gs'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big19.jpg"></center>'
 			'You are leaving the club when Lina comes up to you.'
-			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, wait! Help me, please, to tidy up the equipment in the storage room. The trainer ordered me to do it but the bulb burned out in there. If you will just the flashlight I can do the rest!"'
-			'"Uhm, I''m sorry, Lina, but I must go home." You reply, making a hint to Ivan.'
-			'"So let''s do it, I''ll move it and you hold the flashlight." Ivan breaks in on your conversation.'
-			'"That''s okay, you don''t have to, I can do it myself." Lina quickly replies and walks away.'
+			'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, wait! Help me please! The coach told me to tidy up the equipment in the storage room, but the bulb burned out in there. If you can just hold the flashlight, I can do the rest!"'
+			'"Uhm, I''m sorry Lina, but I must go home." you reply, making a hint to Ivan.'
+			'"So let''s do it then. I''ll move it and you hold the flashlight." Ivan breaks in on your conversation.'
+			'"That''s okay, you don''t have to. I can do it myself." Lina quickly replies and walks away.'
 
 			act 'Go home':
 				cls
@@ -240,7 +240,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 						pcs_horny += 5
 						gs'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/kiss/kiss.jpg"></center>'
-						'You walk slowly to Ivan and incline your face towards his. You hug and kiss and Ivan starts stroking gently your back.'
+						'You walk slowly to Ivan and incline your face towards his. You hug and kiss and Ivan starts gently stroking your back.'
 						act 'Put your hand into his pants':
 							*clr & cla
 							pcs_horny += 10
@@ -261,7 +261,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 								if laris_rand1>=1:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/handjob/hand0,'+rand(0,1)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
 								spafinloc = 13
 								gs 'cum_manage'
-								'You pull out his hard cock from his pants and grasp it firmly with your hand. You kiss Ivan passionately as you pump his cock up and down simultaneously. Finally, Ivan gives a groan of pleasure and you can see streams of his semen gushing out of his cock.'
+								'You pull out his hard cock from his pants and grasp it firmly with your hand. You kiss Ivan passionately as you simultaneously jerk him off. Finally, Ivan lets out a groan of pleasure and you can see streams of his semen gushing out of his cock.'
 
 								act 'Go home':gt'korrPar'
 							end
@@ -274,16 +274,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 				end
 			end
 		end
-	elseif 	FyodorZverHelp = 1:
+	elseif 	LariskaQW['FedorHelp'] = 1:
 		'<center><b><h4><font color=#00ffe4><<"Avelina [Lina] Starov">></font></h4></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big19.jpg"></center>'
 		'As you leave the club Lina approaches you.'
-		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, wait! Help me please, I need to move inventory in the storeroom but the light blew out. Can you please help me move it as soon as I find a flashlight?"'
-		'"Erm, forgive me Lina but I have to go home." you then give Fedor a nod.'
+		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, wait! I need to move inventory in the storeroom but the light blew out. Can you please help me move it as soon as I find a flashlight?"'
+		'"Erm, forgive me Lina but I have to go home." You then give Fedor a nod.'
 		'"C''mon <<$pcs_nickname>>, I just need your help for a few minutes. I can move the heavy stuff." Lina pouts.'
-		'"Sorry but we can''t help you." Fedor says as he grabs your arm then pulls you away toward the street.'
+		'"Sorry, but we can''t help you." Fedor says as he grabs your arm then pulls you away toward the street.'
 		'Lina turns and walks away with a disappointed look on her face.'
-		'You turn to Fedor and say, "Thank you Fedor. I knew that I could count on you." Fedor gives you a kiss on the forehead then walks you home."'
+		'You turn to Fedor and say "Thanks Fedor. I knew that I could count on you." Fedor gives you a kiss on the forehead then walks you home."'
 		*nl
 		'<center><b><h4><font color="blue"><<"Fyodor [Fedor] Kozlov">></font></h4></b></center>'
 		if fedorKozlovQW < -10:
@@ -293,38 +293,49 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 		end
 
 		act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
-	else
+	
+	elseif AlbinaQW['ChristinaHelp'] = 1:
+	    '<center><b><h4><font color=#00ffe4><<"Avelina [Lina] Starov">></font></h4></b></center>'
+		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big19.jpg"></center>'
+		'As you leave the club, Lina approaches you, seemingly wanting to get your attention. However, she quickly runs past you before speaking.'
+		'You look behind you and see Albina standing there smiling. "It seems I got here just in time." she remarks.'
+		'"What do you mean?" you ask as she motions for you to walk with her. "It doesn''t take much to scare Lariska, that adorable little lapdog. She broke as soon as I asked her what Christina was planning. Lina was going to lead you into an ambush where anything could have happened to you." You are alarmed at what she says, but are thankful that she was able to help you in time as you walk outside together.'
+		'You walk together for the next few minutes, chatting to each other. Once you are at a safe distance, you stop to thank Albina for her help. "Don''t mention it." she replies. "I''m sure you''ll find a way to pay me back." she smirks before giving you a firm smack on the ass. You yelp and jump a little, which causes her to smile before you both go your seperate ways.'
+		
+		act 'Go home':gt 'pav_residential'
+	 
+	else	
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big19.jpg"></center>'
 		'You leave the club and see Lina.'
-		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, wait! Help me please, I need to move inventory in the storeroom but the light blew out. Can you please help me move it as soon as I find a flashlight?"'
+		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, wait! I need to move inventory in the storeroom but the light blew out. Can you please help me move it as soon as I find a flashlight?"'
 		act 'Help':
-			if KotovZverHelp = 1:
+			if LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = 1:
 				numnpc = 9
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				gs'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/lariska/sex/fight/start_4.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Okay, why not." You say and follow Lina.'
+				'"Okay, why not?" you say and follow Lina.'
 				'You go into a dark room and hear the door close behind you. You get knocked to the floor and feel hands pulling at your clothes, trying to undress you. You try to resist but the hands move to your throat, strangling you until your consciousness starts to fade.'
-				'Suddenly you hear the sound of heavy blows on the door and the door falls in on you and the guy that was sitting on top of you. You are pinned underneath and cannot move, but you hear the sounds of a fight going on around you. After a while it gets silent, and like through a haze you hear a faint voice from Kotova "Turn on the light!"'
+				'Suddenly you hear the sound of heavy blows on the door and the door falls in on you and the guy that was sitting on top of you. You are pinned underneath and cannot move, but you hear the sounds of a fight going on around you. After a while it grows silent, and through your haze you hear the faint sound of Vitek''s voice. "Turn on the light!"'
 				act 'Recover':
 					cls
 					minut += 40
 					gs'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/lariska/sex/fight/start_kotov_end.jpg"></center>'
-					'You open your eyes and see the worried face of Kotova:'
-					'"You''re, like, okay?"'
-					'"Yes, thank you, saved me!"'
-					'"Looks like we came just in time! Prokhorov saw you and told us where to look! We broke some of that crackhead''s bones and captured Lina and Christina, so don''t worry."'
+					'You open your eyes and see Vitek looking worried.'
+					'"Are you okay?"'
+					'"Yes, thank you. You saved me!"'
+					'"Looks like we came just in time! Ivan saw you and told us where to look! We broke some of that crackhead''s bones and captured Lina and Christina, so don''t worry."'
 					act 'Keep silent':LinaSlut = 1 & gt'kotovSex'
-					act 'Don''t be too harsh with Lina, Zvereva had this planned!':gt'kotovSex'
+					act 'Don''t be too harsh on Lina':gt'kotovSex'
 				end
 			else
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				gs'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/lariska/sex/fight/start_4.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Okay, why not." You say and follow Lina.'
+				'"Okay, why not?" you say and follow Lina.'
 				'You go into a dark room and hear the door close behind you. You get knocked to the floor and feel hands pulling at your clothes, trying to undress you. You try to resist but the hands move to your throat, strangling you until your consciousness fades.'
 				act 'Wake up':
 					cls

locations/ender.qsrc

@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		killvar 'autocombat_surrender'
 		fightEnding = 0
 
-		'You fall down on the floor and feel your consciousness slipping away.'
+		'You fall to the floor and feel your consciousness slipping away.'
 
 		act 'Further': gt 'preTG', 'tatianaPRE'
 		exit
@@ -26,7 +26,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		killvar 'autocombat_surrender'
 		fightEnding = 0
 
-		'You fall down on the floor as you''re not longer able to fight Gustav.'
+		'You fall to the floor as you''re not longer able to fight Gustav.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'tatiana_lab','start'
 		exit
@@ -35,7 +35,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		killvar 'autocombat_surrender'
 		fightEnding = 0
 
-		'You fall down on the floor as you''re not longer able to fight Tatiana.'
+		'You fall to the floor as you''re not longer able to fight Tatiana.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'tatiana_lab','start'
 		exit
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		if rikudo > 10:rikudo = rikudo - 10
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/dom/spit.jpg"></center>'
-		'You fall to the ground. The prostitute kicks you around a couple of times. She grabs hold of your purse and takes all your money. As she''s done she leans over you and spits in your face.'
+		'You fall to the ground. The prostitute kicks you around a couple of times before she grabs hold of your purse and takes all your money. As she''s done she leans over you and spits in your face.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'city_park','start'
 		exit
@@ -62,8 +62,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		if rikudo > 10:rikudo = rikudo - 10
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/centralpark/sex/event/band.jpg"></center>'
-		'You fall to the ground. As you''re laying down the pimp lites a cigarette while rummaging through your stuff. He finally finds what he''s been looking for, all of your money, then orders, "Open your mouth slut".'
-		'You obey and open your mouth. He sighs as taps ash into your mouth, "I hope you''ve learned a valuable lesson slut, next time I won''t be this kind to you."'
+		'You fall to the ground. As you''re lying there, the pimp lights a cigarette while rummaging through your stuff. He finally finds what he''s been looking for - all of your money. "Open your mouth slut." he orders.'
+		'You obey and open your mouth. He sighs as he taps ash into your mouth. "I hope you''ve learned a valuable lesson slut. I won''t be this kind next time."'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'city_park','start'
 		exit
@@ -77,7 +77,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		if rikudo > 10:rikudo = rikudo - 10
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/ira/sex/irinaqw7.jpg"></center>'
-		'You fall to the ground. The prostitute kicks you around a couple of times. She grabs hold of your purse and takes all your money.'
+		'You fall to the ground. The prostitute kicks you around a couple of times before she grabs hold of your purse and takes all your money.'
 		'"This won''t do." she says as you''re ordered to kneel. She pulls her panties to the side as she sits on your face, forcing you to lick her semen filled pussy.'
 		'Afraid of getting beaten again, you carefully lick her crotch clean. After a few minutes she''s satisfied and leaves.'
 
@@ -102,9 +102,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		gs 'cum_manage'
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/kisame/sex/kisamesex.jpg"></center>'
-		'Kisame swims around you and laughs, "I''m having a great time baby." as he grabs and drags your feet to the bottom of the pool, where he thrusts his cock in your pussy.'
-		'You try not to drown in the water while you are fucked by Kisame, You feel him pounding your insides with his member like a hammer. You can no longer hold your breath as you begin to drown.'
-		'Kisame smiles and leans over you, "Kiss me." You stick your lips to his mouth, as his breath fill your lungs with air before keeping on pounding your pussy. Finally he finishes, pouring his shark seed into the surrounding water.'
+		'Kisame swims around you and laughs. "I''m having a great time baby." He grabs and drags your feet to the bottom of the pool, where he thrusts his cock into your pussy.'
+		'You try not to drown in the water while you are fucked by Kisame. You feel him pounding your insides with his member like a hammer. You can no longer hold your breath as you begin to drown.'
+		'Kisame smiles and leans over you. "Kiss me." You stick your lips to his mouth, as his breath fills your lungs with air before he continues pounding your pussy. Finally he finishes, pouring his shark seed into the surrounding water.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 20, 'rough', 'sub'
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -143,10 +143,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 
 		horand = RAND(1,100)
 
-		'"Please, you don''t have to do this." you try to reason with him, "I''m begging you."'
-		'But your words are in vain, you put up a pathetic attempt to fend him off, but you lost, and now all you can do is stare at the stars while your body is used for someone''s filthiest fantasies.'
+		'"Please, you don''t have to do this." you try to reason with him. "I''m begging you."'
+		'But your words are in vain. You put up a pathetic attempt to fend him off, but you lost, and now all you can do is stare at the stars while your body is used for someone''s filthiest fantasies.'
 		'Your clothes are ripped off as you shout in helpless frustration as his cold hands touch you in your most intimate places. You close your eyes, not willing to look at your torturer, nor his hard cock hanging above you.'
 		'A second later you feel your attackers noxious breath on your face, his stench is almost worse than what he''s doing between your legs.'
+		*nl
 		'You open your eyes, swollen from crying, to look at your rapist''s face, but you can''t see it. You only see an animal, or worse, a great darkness.'
 		'The silence of the night is only broken by the slapping flesh and his curses, until you begin to falsely moan in excitement, trying to make your rapist to finish quicker and end the torment.'
 		'Even though the pain is intense, your trick works, and before you know it the attacker cums, shooting his seed all over your pussy and belly. He quickly wipes his dick on you, puts it away, and leaves.'
@@ -164,7 +165,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		fightEnding = 0
 		Loss += 1
 		money = 0
-		'He knocks you down with one final hit. The moment he puts you out of commission he grabs the money and runs away.'
+		'He knocks you down with one final hit. The moment he puts you out of commission, he grabs the money and runs away.'
 		act 'Get back on your feet': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		exit
 	elseif fightEnding = 10:
@@ -174,9 +175,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		grupvalue[4] -= 2
 		if Loss < 0: Loss = 0
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/dimka/revenge/girlbeatsguy2.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Where the hell did you learn how to fight, <<$pcs_nickname>>," Lera asks in an annoyed tone before sweeping Dimka''s legs out from under him. Lena and Lera proceed to kick and stomp Dimka until he starts begging them to stop.'
-		'After a few more hits, they get bored and check his pockets for cash. "10.000 rubles! Sweet!" They split the money among themselves leaving none for you.'
-		'Lena turns to you and says tauntingly, "You either need to learn how to fight or get used to serving us, little bunny." Before you can say anything, the bell rings for class.'
+		'"Where the hell did you learn how to fight <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lera asks in an annoyed tone before sweeping Dimka''s legs out from under him. Lena and Lera proceed to kick and stomp Dimka until he starts begging them to stop.'
+		'After a few more hits, they get bored and check his pockets for cash. "10,000 rubles?! Sweet!" They split the money among themselves, leaving none for you.'
+		'Lena turns to you and tauntingly says "You either need to learn how to fight or get used to serving us, little bunny." Before you can say anything, the bell rings for class.'
 
 		act 'Continue': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	elseif fightEnding = 11:
@@ -186,7 +187,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		Loss += 1
 		if rikudo > 10:rikudo = rikudo - 10
 
-		'In their drunken state they throw you on the spit-covered porch and began tearing your clothes as you no longer have the strength to resist.'
+		'In their drunken state, they throw you on the spit-covered porch and begin tearing your clothes as you no longer have the strength to resist.'
 
 		act 'Cry':gt'sexm','gangbang'
 	elseif fightEnding = 12:
@@ -197,9 +198,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		Loss += 1
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/dom/spit.jpg"></center>'
-		'Christina Zverev beat you and you fell to the ground crying in front of the whole school. She hissed angrily to you "Now I''ll make your life hell, slut!" She bent down to your face and said, "Open your mouth bitch and stick your tongue out."'
-		'You comply and open your mouth with your tongue out. Without any hesitation Christina spits in your mouth and yells, "Swallow bitch!" The whole school see you swallow her spit.'
-		'Christina then again spits on you this time on your face. While making fun of you, Christina kicks you a few times more in the ribs before turning around and walking away.'
+		'Christina beats you and you fall to the ground, crying in front of the whole school. She hisses angrily to you. "Now I''ll make your life hell, slut!" She bends down to your face. "Open your mouth and stick your tongue out, bitch."'
+		'You comply and open your mouth with your tongue out. Without any hesitation, Christina spits in your mouth and yells "Swallow bitch!" The whole school watches as you swallow her spit.'
+		'Christina then spits on your face. While making fun of you, Christina kicks you a few more times in the ribs before turning around and walking away.'
 
 		act 'Leave':gs 'gschool_grounds', 'main'
 	elseif fightEnding = 13:
@@ -222,10 +223,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		dynamic '<<$clothingworntype>>H[<<clothingwornnumber>>] = 0'
 		'<<$streetev_title>>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/street/lostfight.jpg"></center>'
-		'You do your best, but there are just too many of them. Eventually they get you down on the ground and beat you, ripping out handfuls of your hair, ripping you clothes.'
-		'After what feels like a long time, they finally stop hitting you. "That''s what you get, you stupid bitch." Then the girl spits on you, soon the rest of the gang follow suit and spit on you as well. Finally they get bored of tormenting you further and leave laughing about how they beat the ugly girls ass.'
+		'You do your best, but there are just too many of them. Eventually they get you down on the ground and beat you, ripping out handfuls of your hair and tearing your clothes.'
+		'After what feels like an eternity, they finally stop hitting you. "That''s what you get, you stupid bitch." Then the girl spits on you, with the rest of the gang following suit and spitting on you as well. Finally they get bored of tormenting you further and leave, laughing about how they beat the ugly girls ass.'
 		*nl
-		'With tears rolling down your face you slowly get up and do your best to pull your clothes into place to cover up. They are just ruined, you gingerly walk away.'
+		'With tears rolling down your face, you slowly get up and do your best to pull your clothes into place to cover up before you gingerly walk away.'
 		act 'Leave':streetrand=-1 & gt $loc
 	elseif fightEnding = 15:
 		if autocombat_surrender = 0 or pcs_health < 100: pcs_health = 100
@@ -234,18 +235,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		Loss += 1
 		pcs_mood -= 20
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/fight/nakedlose.jpg"></center>'
-		'You do your best, you really thought you could beat Christina, but she is just so fast. She hits harder than most guys and worse, someone has trained her how to fight. In the end you find you are no match for her, a blow finally knocks you down and you land on your back. You know you can''t win at this point so you just lay there. Christina smirks at you as you lay there and she pulls her phone back out and takes more pictures of you. "That''s right bitch, I own your ass now, Now roll over and get on your hands and knees." You reluctantly do as she says.'
+		'You do your best, you really thought you could beat Christina, but she is just so fast. She hits harder than most guys and worse, someone has trained her how to fight. In the end you find you are no match for her, a blow finally knocks you down and you land on your back. You know you can''t win at this point so you just lay there. Christina smirks at you as you lay there and she pulls her phone back out and takes more pictures of you. "That''s right bitch, I own your ass now. Now roll over and get on your hands and knees." You reluctantly do as she says.'
 		act 'Do as she says':
 			cla & *clr
 			pcs_mood -= 10
 			christinaphotos = 3
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/christina/beach/onall4s.jpg"></center>'
-			'Now spread those legs so we can get a nice shot of that disgusting pussy and dirty ass of yours." You blush with shame but do as she says, she takes several more pictures laughing the whole time. "You are going to do anything I want any time I say it from now on or everyone in school will see these and I will kick your ass again, right?" You meekly nod on the verge of tears.'
+			'Now spread those legs so we can get a nice shot of that disgusting pussy and dirty ass of yours." You blush with shame but do as she says. She takes several more pictures, laughing the whole time. "You are going to do anything I want any time I say it from now on or everyone in school will see these and I will kick your ass again, right?" You meekly nod on the verge of tears.'
 			*nl
-			'Then you feel a swift kick from behind, between your open legs, as Christina kicks you in the twat hard. You cry out and tears running down your cheeks as you grab your crotch and roll over onto your side with your legs squeezed closed. "Then say it! Say you are a little cunt and will do anything I say anytime I say it." Christina demands as she towers over you.'
+			'Then you feel a swift kick from behind, between your open legs, as Christina kicks you in the twat hard. You cry out and tears start running down your cheeks as you grab your crotch and roll over onto your side with your legs squeezed closed. "Then say it! Say you are a little cunt and will do anything I say anytime I say it." Christina demands as she towers over you.'
 			*nl
-			'You croak out. "I am a little cunt that will do anything you say, anytime you say it." With that Christina laughs with a fairly evil laugh, she seems to be enjoying bullying you a lot, then she and Lina walk off leaving you laying on the beach naked and in pain. Once the walk off you dry your tears as best you can and get up.'
+			'You croak out. "I am a little cunt that will do anything you say, anytime you say it." Christina laughs in an evil, satisifed tone - she seems to be enjoying bullying you a lot. She and Lina then walk off, leaving you laying on the beach naked and in pain. Once they walk off, you dry your tears as best you can and get up.'
 			gs 'pain', 1, 'labia', 'kick'
 
 			act 'Walk off': gt 'gLake'
@@ -264,9 +265,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>! Oh my god! What happened to you?!"'    
 		'Katja and Vicky appear over you and help Vanya take away your beaten body. It hurts a lot but somehow, after a while, you manage to stand without seeing stars. The trio looks at you in askance.'    
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>! I don''t know what to do with you! What were you thinking?!"'
-		'Demure Katja is really, really pissed and for a long while, she chastizes your actions. The fact that you are hurting doesn''t seem to make her stop, but finally, after a long-winded tirade, the redhead seems to deflate and gives you a tired hug.' 
+		'Katja is really, really pissed and for a long while, she chastizes your actions. The fact that you are hurting doesn''t seem to make her stop, but finally, after a long-winded tirade, the redhead seems to deflate and gives you a tired hug.' 
 		'"Please! Don''t do that again!"'
-		'It feels nice and makes Vanya & Vicky spell and sonorous "Kawai!" before quickly turning back and running away from an embarrassed/angry Katja. It was "fun", but it is time to look for something else to do.'		
+		'It feels nice and makes Vanya & Vicky spell a sonorous "Kawai!" before quickly turning back and running away from an embarrassed/angry Katja. It was "fun", but it is time to look for something else to do.'		
 
 		act 'Continue': gt 'katjaEV', 'kathan'
 	elseif fightEnding = 17:
@@ -284,7 +285,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		'"It''s evident that you can''t handle her, so it would be better for a more experienced magician to take care of this anomaly."'
 		'You finally manage to stand on shaky legs, and give her a good look. She isn''t a Succubus, but she is old and powerful. That means two things. First, you will be hard-pressed to take the film from her grasp, and second, she must be an incredible tasty lay!'
 		'"Who... Who are you?"'
-		'She sneers and says, "I suppose this is time for a presentation. You can call me Aleksei, and you are?"'
+		'She sneers and says "I suppose this is time for a presentation. You can call me Aleksei, and you are?"'
 
 		act '"I am..."':intel_lvlst -= 20 & gt'tatiana_missions','mission2D'
 	end
@@ -309,7 +310,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		if winJugo = 0:winJugo = 1
 
 		'Gustav falls to the floor. He can no longer continue the fight.'
-		'"You have improved greatly, few can beat me in combat." He says with reverence.'
+		'"You have improved greatly, few can beat me in combat." he says with reverence.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'tatiana_lab','start'
 		exit
@@ -319,7 +320,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		rikudo = rikudo + 10
 		if wintatiana = 0:wintatiana = 1
 
-		'Tatiana fell to the floor and can no longer keep on fighting.'
+		'Tatiana falls to the floor and can no longer keep on fighting.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'tatiana_lab','start'
 		exit
@@ -341,7 +342,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		rikudo = rikudo + 10
 		if prostOnce = 0:prostOnce = 1 & money = money + RAND(500,5000)
 
-		'The pimp fell to the ground letting out a groan, You took his wallet and kicked him around before moving away.'
+		'The pimp falls to the ground, letting out a pained groan. You take his wallet and kick him around before moving away.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'city_park','start'
 		exit
@@ -352,7 +353,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		rikudo = rikudo + 10
 		money = money + RAND(300,500)
 
-		'Tattered prostitute fell to the ground, you crash it again in the ribs and it took all his money and gave it to you, Only you did not beat her anymore.'
+		'The tattered prostitute falls to the ground. You give her a powerful kick in the ribs and she hands over her money, begging for you to stop.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'city_park','start'
 		exit
@@ -363,7 +364,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		if rikudo > 10:rikudo = rikudo + 3000
 		money = money + 5000
 
-		'You killed Kisame and while disposing his body you found 5000 rubles. It''s probably best not to hang around.'
+		'You kill Kisame and while disposing his body, you find 5000 rubles. It''s probably best not to hang around.'
 
 		act 'Dress and leave':
 			gs 'underwear', 'wear'
@@ -397,11 +398,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		grupvalue[4] += 3
 		Win += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/dimka/revenge/girlbeatsguy1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You kick Dimka a few more times as he lays on the ground. "It will be worse next time if you keep spreading shit about me."'
-		'"I''ll stop talking, I swear," Dimka says between pained breaths.'
+		'You kick Dimka a few more times as he lies on the ground. "Keep spreading shit about me and I''ll beat your sorry ass even harder next time!"'
+		'"I''ll stop, I swear!" Dimka says between pained breaths.'
 		'"You better." You turn to leave, but Lena stops you.'
-		'"Check his pockets," she says, "I''ll keep watch."'
-		'You check his pockets and find 10000 rubles in his wallet. Fucking rich kid. This should teach him. "The teacher is coming," says Lera, "Let''s get out of here."'
+		'"Check his pockets." she says "I''ll keep watch."'
+		'You check his pockets and find 10,000 rubles in his wallet. Fucking rich kid. This should teach him. "The teacher is coming!" says Lera, "Let''s get out of here!"'
 
 		act 'Continue': gt 'gschool_lessons', 'short_break'
 	elseif fightEnding = 11:
@@ -410,7 +411,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		Win += 1
 		money += rand(500,2000)
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You''ve managed to batter one of your attackers face while you broke the others nose. As he spits you can see that his spit is mixed with blood as he can barely hold his hand up to surrender. You quickly run over to them and empty the cash from their pockets and mock them that this should cover you expenses. The attacker quickly rise up and run away in fear.'
+		'You''ve managed to batter one of your attacker''s face while you broke the other''s nose. As he spits, you can see that his spit is mixed with blood as he can barely hold his hand up to surrender. You quickly run over to them and empty the cash from their pockets and mock them. They quickly stumble to their feet and run away in fear.'
 
 		act 'Go home':	gt 'din_npc', 'go_home'
 
@@ -423,9 +424,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		$npc_notes['A13'] = 'Lariska, who is very dependent on other people''s opinions. After you managed to win the fight against Christina Lariska looks more cheerful. She''s a good volleyball player, and could go pro if she keeps it up even though she doesn''t believe it herself. But with the help of Mikhail Nikolayevich, the volleyball coach, she might make it.'
 		$npc_notes['A18'] = 'After you beat Christina in front of the whole school, they started gossiping about how you managed to break her. Once known as the school bully, she is now a shell of her former self.'
 		npc_grupTipe['A18'] = 5
-		'Christina fell to the ground, and you grabbed her by the hair. "Well bitch, tell the whole school, did you suck his cock or not?" Christine squealed as she admitted to the whole school that she sucked his cock to be allowed to go to the regional competition.'
-		'Leaning forward so nobody else could hear, you tell her "From now on, you don''t get to wear panties to school." Shaking her head no, you twist her hair a little more, making her yelp, and say "For that, you will wear a buttplug everyday too. Want to keep pushing it?"'
-		'She looks at you in fear and nods. "I cannot hear you, Christina," you growl, twisting her hair again. "Yes, <<$pcs_nickname>>, no more panties, and wear a buttplug!" she gasps out. Letting her go, you look down at her, and realize from now on, she is yours to do with as you please.'
+		'Christina falls to the ground, and you grab her by the hair. "Well bitch, tell the whole school. Did you suck his cock or not?" Christins squeals as she admits to the whole school that she sucked his cock to be allowed to go to the regional competition.'
+		'Leaning forward so nobody else can hear, you tell her "From now on, you don''t get to wear panties to school." Shaking her head, you twist her hair a little more, making her yelp, and say "For that, you will wear a buttplug everyday too. Want to keep pushing it?"'
+		'She looks at you in fear and nods. "I can''t hear you Christina!" you growl, twisting her hair again. "Yes, <<$pcs_nickname>>, no more panties, and wear a buttplug!" she gasps. Letting her go, you look down at her, and realize from now on, she is yours to do with as you please.'
 		act 'Leave':gs 'gschool_grounds', 'main'
 	elseif fightEnding = 13:
 		fightEnding = 0
@@ -446,7 +447,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
 		Win += 1
 		pcs_mood += 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/christina/beach/losefight.jpg"></center>'
-		'Christina is a hell of a fighter, she is fast, hits harder than most boys and knows what she is doing. Yet despite all that she just isn''t a match for you. You finally land a few hard blows and she goes down gasping for breath, holding up her hand in a signal of no more, you smirk as she lays beaten at your feet. You reach down and pull her phone out of her pocket and then heave it as far as you can out into the lake where it plops into the water. Lina seems to be stunned that you beat Christina and she looks a little afraid of you. "Now neither you you seen me here naked right? And since I wasn''t here, that means I didn''t beat you ass, but from now on we both know who''s the bitch don''t we?" You say to both of them. Lina nods quickly Christina a little slower but she nods as well. With that you walk away from the two of them as Lina helps Christina back to her feet.'
+		'Christina is a hell of a fighter. She is fast, hits harder than most boys and knows what she is doing. Yet despite all that she just isn''t a match for you. You finally land a few hard blows and she goes down gasping for breath, holding up her hand in surrender. You smirk as she lies beaten at your feet. You reach down and pull her phone out of her pocket and then toss it as far as you can out into the lake where it plops into the water.' 
+		'Lina seems to be stunned that you beat Christina and she looks a little afraid of you. "Neither you seen me here naked, right? And since I wasn''t here, that means I didn''t beat you ass, but from now on we both know who''s the bitch don''t we?" you say to both of them. Lina nods quickly while Christina is reluctant to agree, but soon nods herself. You confidently walk away as Lina helps Christina back to her feet.'
 
 		act 'Walk off': gt 'gLake'
 	elseif fightEnding = 16:
@@ -492,7 +494,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		fightEnding = 0
 
 		'He ignores your pleas and hits you with a huge upper cut.'
-		'You fall down on the floor and feel your consciousness slipping away.'
+		'You fall to the floor and feel your consciousness slipping away.'
 
 		act 'Further': gt 'preTG', 'tatianaPRE'
 		exit
@@ -501,7 +503,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		killvar 'autocombat_surrender'
 		fightEnding = 0
 
-		'You raise your hands asking Gustav to stop, he complains that he hasn''t even warmed up yet but stops the fight.'
+		'You raise your hands asking Gustav to stop. He complains that he hasn''t even warmed up yet, but stops the fight.'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'tatiana_lab','start'
 		exit
@@ -523,15 +525,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/dom/spit.jpg"></center>'
 		if fightPStats['Health'] = pcs_health:
-			'Just the mere thought of a fight, your knees go weak and you feel yourself being out of breath. Before even the first punch is thrown you raise up your hands and squeak out in fear, "Don''t hurt me, I give up."'
+			'Just the mere thought of a fight, your knees go weak and you feel yourself being out of breath. Before even the first punch is thrown you raise up your hands and squeak out in fear. "Don''t hurt me, I give up."'
 			'The prostitute grabs your bag and takes all your cash.'
 			'"Now fuck off, bitch!"'
 		elseif fightPStats['Health'] > pcs_health/2:
-			'You are already feeling the pain of the blows, you can''t take it anymore. You throw up your hands, "Please stop! I give up."'
+			'You are already feeling the pain of the blows, you can''t take it anymore. You throw up your hands in surrender. "Please stop! I give up."'
 			'The prostitute grabs your bag and takes all your cash.'
 			'"Now fuck off, bitch!"'
 		else
-			'You thought this would be an easy win, but you were mistaken. Blow after blow rains down on you, you are so dazed you can barely see. You stumble and fall to the ground and decide to just stay there, "I give up, I can''t beat you."'
+			'You thought this would be an easy win, but you were mistaken. Blow after blow rains down on you, you are so dazed you can barely see. You stumble and fall to the ground and decide to just stay there. "I give up, I can''t beat you."'
 			'The prostitute grabs your bag and takes all your cash.'
 			'"Now fuck off, bitch!"'
 		end
@@ -548,8 +550,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		bandfight = bandfight - 1
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/centralpark/sex/event/band.jpg"></center>'
-		'The pimp lites a cigarette while rummaging through your stuff. He finally finds what he''s been looking for, all of your money, then orders, "Open your mouth slut".'
-		'You obey and open your mouth. He sighs as taps ash into your mouth, "I hope you''ve learned a valuable lesson slut, next time I won''t be this kind to you."'
+		'The pimp lights a cigarette while rummaging through your stuff. He finally finds what he''s been looking for - all of your money. "Open your mouth slut." he orders.'
+		'You obey and open your mouth. He sighs as he taps ash into your mouth. "I hope you''ve learned a valuable lesson slut. I won''t be this kind next time."'
 
 		act 'Further':gt'city_park','start'
 		exit
@@ -562,11 +564,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/ira/sex/irinaqw7.jpg"></center>'
 
 		if fightPStats['Health'] = pcs_health:
-			'Just as the fight is about to begin, you realize that you don''t want any part of it. Your opponent is nearing you which has you yelling, "We don''t need to fight. I''m giving up already!"'
+			'Just as the fight is about to begin, you realize that you don''t want any part of it. Your opponent is nearing you which has you yelling "We don''t need to fight. I''m giving up already!"'
 		elseif fightPStats['Health'] > pcs_health/2:
-			'You thought you were going to win but now you know better, your opponent is just a better fighter than you, rather than take more of a beating before losing you decide discretion is the better part of valor, "You win, I can''t beat you."'
+			'You thought you were going to win but now you know better, your opponent is just a better fighter than you. Rather than take more of a beating before losing, you decide discretion is the better part of valor. "You win, I can''t beat you."'
 		else
-			'The pain from the blows are more than you can bear, you feel tears streaming down your face. You drop to your knees and cower before your opponent, "Please stop!" You beg them to stop but in their frezied state they just shove you, causing you to fall to the ground.'
+			'The pain from the blows are more than you can bear and you feel tears streaming down your face. You drop to your knees and cower before your opponent. "Please stop!" you beg, but in their frezied state they just shove you, causing you to fall to the ground.'
 			'Awaiting your fate, you just lay prostrate before your opponent, showing you have no fighting spirit left, hoping they''ll stop hurting you.'
 
 		end
@@ -597,9 +599,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/kisame/sex/kisamesex.jpg"></center>'
 
 
-		'Kisame swims around you and laughs, "I''m having a great time baby." as he grabs and drags your feet to the bottom of the pool, where he thrusts his cock in your pussy.'
+		'Kisame swims around you and laughs. "I''m having a great time baby." He grabs and drags your feet to the bottom of the pool, where he thrusts his cock in your pussy.'
 		'You try not to drown in the water while you are fucked by Kisame, You feel him pounding your insides with his member like a hammer. You can no longer hold your breath as you begin to drown.'
-		'Kisame smiles and leans over you, "Kiss me." You stick your lips to his mouth, as his breath fill your lungs with air before keeping on pounding your pussy. Finally he finishes, pouring his shark seed into the surrounding water.'
+		'Kisame smiles and leans over you. "Kiss me." You stick your lips to his mouth, as his breath fills your lungs with air before keeping on pounding your pussy. Finally he finishes, pouring his shark seed into the surrounding water.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 20, 'rough', 'sub'
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -639,10 +641,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		horand = RAND(1,100)
 
 
-		'"Please, you don''t have to do this." you try to reason with him, "I''m begging you."'
+		'"Please, you don''t have to do this." you try to reason with him. "I''m begging you."'
 		'But your words are in vain, you put up a pathetic attempt to fend him off, but you lost, and now all you can do is stare at the stars while your body is used for someone''s filthiest fantasies.'
 		'Your clothes are ripped off as you shout in helpless frustration as his cold hands touch you in your most intimate places. You close your eyes, not willing to look at your torturer, nor his hard cock hanging above you.'
 		'A second later you feel your attackers noxious breath on your face, his stench is almost worse than what he''s doing between your legs.'
+		*nl
 		'You open your eyes, swollen from crying, to look at your rapist''s face, but you can''t see it. You only see an animal, or worse, a great darkness.'
 		'The silence of the night is only broken by the slapping flesh and his curses, until you begin to falsely moan in excitement, trying to make your rapist to finish quicker and end the torment.'
 		'Even though the pain is intense, your trick works, and before you know it the attacker cums, shooting his seed all over your pussy and belly. He quickly wipes his dick on you, puts it away, and leaves.'
@@ -662,11 +665,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		money = money / 2
 
 		if fightPStats['Health'] = pcs_health:
-			'Your opponents demeanour is making you worried, they seem to have the overhand and you start doubting in yourself. Your opponent starts running towards you but before they strike you start yelling, "I give up! I give up!"'
+			'Your opponent''s demeanour is making you worried. They seem to have the upper hand and you start doubting yourself. Your opponent starts running towards you, but before they strike you start yelling "I give up! I give up!"'
 		elseif fightPStats['Health'] > pcs_health/2:
-			'You thought you were going to win but now you know better, your opponent is just a better fighter than you, rather than take more of a beating before losing you decide desecration is the better part of valor, "You win, I can''t beat you."'
+			'You thought you were going to win but now you know better, your opponent is just a better fighter than you. Rather than take more of a beating before losing, you decide desecration is the better part of valor. "You win, I can''t beat you."'
 		else
-			'Your opponent is landing hit after hit and is superior. You''re meekly standing there taking every punch thrown at you. Before you know it you''re laying on the floor not wanting to get up even though you hear your opponent yelling that they''re not done yet. You raise your arm and shake it, signaling that you''ve had enough and are giving up.'
+			'Your opponent is landing hit after hit and is superior. You''re meekly standing there taking every punch thrown at you. Before you know it, you''re laying on the floor not wanting to get up even though you hear your opponent yelling that they''re not done yet. You raise your arm and shake it, signalling that you''ve had enough and are giving up.'
 		end
 		'He grabs about half the cash in your purse and runs away.'
 		act 'Get back on your feet': gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -679,17 +682,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/dimka/revenge/girlbeatsguy2.jpg"></center>'
 
 		if fightPStats['Health'] = pcs_health:
-			'What the fuck, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lera asks in an annoyed tone before sweeping Dimka''s legs out from under him. Lena and Lera proceed to kick and stomp Dimka until he starts begging them to stop.'
-			'After a few more hits, they get bored and check his pockets for cash. "10.000 rubles! Sweet!" They split the money among themselves leaving none for you.'
-			'Lena turns to you and says tauntingly, "You either need to learn how to fight or get used to serving us, little bunny." Before you can say anything, the bell rings for class.'
+			'What the fuck <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lera asks in an annoyed tone before sweeping Dimka''s legs out from under him. Lena and Lera proceed to kick and stomp Dimka until he starts begging them to stop.'
+			'After a few more hits, they get bored and check his pockets for cash. "10,000 rubles?! Sweet!" They split the money among themselves, leaving none for you.'
+			'Lena turns to you and tauntingly says "You either need to learn how to fight or get used to serving us, little bunny." Before you can say anything, the bell rings for class.'
 		elseif fightPStats['Health'] > pcs_health/2:
-			'"That was pathetic, <<$pcs_nickname>>," Lera states in shock before sweeping Dimka''s legs out from under him. Lena and Lera proceed to kick and stomp Dimka until he starts begging them to stop.'
-			'After a few more hits, they get bored and check his pockets for cash. "10.000 rubles! Sweet!" They split the money among themselves leaving none for you.'
-			'Lena turns to you and says tauntingly, "You either need to learn how to fight or get used to serving us, little bunny." Before you can say anything, the bell rings for class.'
+			'"That was pathetic <<$pcs_nickname>>." Lera states in shock before sweeping Dimka''s legs out from under him. Lena and Lera proceed to kick and stomp Dimka until he starts begging them to stop.'
+			'After a few more hits, they get bored and check his pockets for cash. "10,000 rubles?! Sweet!" They split the money among themselves, leaving none for you.'
+			'Lena turns to you and tauntingly says "You either need to learn how to fight or get used to serving us, little bunny." Before you can say anything, the bell rings for class.'
 		else
-			'"Where the hell did you learn how to fight, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lera asks in an annoyed tone before sweeping Dimka''s legs out from under him. Lena and Lera proceed to kick and stomp Dimka until he starts begging them to stop.'
-			'After a few more hits, they get bored and check his pockets for cash. "10.000 rubles! Sweet!" They split the money among themselves leaving none for you.'
-			'Lena turns to you and says tauntingly, "You either need to learn how to fight or get used to serving us, little bunny." Before you can say anything, the bell rings for class.'
+			'"Where the hell did you learn how to fight <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lera asks in an annoyed tone before sweeping Dimka''s legs out from under him. Lena and Lera proceed to kick and stomp Dimka until he starts begging them to stop.'
+			'After a few more hits, they get bored and check his pockets for cash. "10,000 rubles?! Sweet!" They split the money among themselves, leaving none for you.'
+			'Lena turns to you and tauntingly says "You either need to learn how to fight or get used to serving us, little bunny." Before you can say anything, the bell rings for class.'
 		end
 
 		if pcs_health < 100: pcs_health = 100
@@ -700,8 +703,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		fightEnding = 0
 		Loss += 1
 
-		'They are very drunk and one of them shouts, "Loser has to fuck us all!".'
-		'Laughing at first but soon getting very serious they strip you naked and push you to the floor.'
+		'They are very drunk and one of them shouts "Loser has to fuck us all!".'
+		'Laughing at first, but soon getting very serious they strip you naked and push you to the floor.'
 
 		act 'Cry':gt'sexm','gangbang'
 	elseif fightEnding = 12:
@@ -713,15 +716,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/dom/spit.jpg"></center>'
 
 		if fightPStats['Health'] = pcs_health:
-			'Just the mere thought of a fight, your knees go weak and you feel yourself being out of breath. Before even the first punch is thrown you raise up your hands and squeak out in fear, "Don''t hurt me, I give up."'
+			'Just the mere thought of a fight, your knees go weak and you feel yourself being out of breath. Before even the first punch is thrown you raise up your hands and squeak out in fear. "Don''t hurt me, I give up."'
 		elseif fightPStats['Health'] > pcs_health/2:
-			'A hard blow to your face stuns you a moment and you can feel blood running from you nose. Panic sets in as you fear getting your face messed up and you say, "You win, just stopping hitting me."'
+			'A hard blow to your face stuns you for a moment and you can feel blood running from your nose. Panic sets in as you fear getting your face messed up and you say "You win, just stopping hitting me!"'
 		else
-			'You feel bruised and beaten by Christina. They are hitting you everywhere and you''re barely able to defend yourself. All of a sudden you lose your footing and land on your feet. Right there you decide that it''s not worth fighting on, "I give up..." you barely find the strength to whisper...'
+			'You feel bruised and beaten by Christina. She is hitting you everywhere and you''re barely able to defend yourself. All of a sudden you lose your footing and land on your ass. Right there you decide that it''s not worth fighting on. "I give up..." you barely find the strength to whisper...'
 		end
-		'Christina Zverev laughs a cruel laugh knowing she has won. She hisses angrily to you "Now I''ll make your life hell, slut!" She looks you in the eye and says, "Open your mouth bitch and stick your tongue out."'
-		'You comply and open your mouth with your tongue out. Without any hesitation Christina spits in your mouth and yells, "Swallow bitch!" The whole school see you swallow her spit.'
-		'Christina then again spits on you this time on your face. Christina seems satisfied as she turns around and walks away.'
+		'Christina laughs a cruel laugh, knowing she has won. She hisses angrily to you "Now I''ll make your life hell, slut!" She looks you in the eye and says "Open your mouth and stick your tongue out, bitch."'
+		'You comply and open your mouth with your tongue out. Without any hesitation, Christina spits in your mouth and yells "Swallow bitch!" The whole school watches as you swallow her spit.'
+		'Christina finishes by spitting on your face. She seems satisfied as she turns around and walks away.'
 
 		if pcs_health < 100: pcs_health = 100
 		act 'Leave':gs 'gschool_grounds', 'main'
@@ -741,15 +744,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		'<<$streetev_title>>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/street/lostfight.jpg"></center>'
 		if fightPStats['Health'] = pcs_health:
-			'Just the mere thought of a fight, your knees go weak and you feel yourself being out of breath. Before even the first punch is thrown you raise up your hands and squeak out in fear, "Don''t hurt me, I give up."'
-			'There is just too many of them. You yell, "We don''t need to fight. I''m giving up already!"'
-			'They circle around you pulling at your hair and calling you names before one of them spits in your face. After that they lose interest and wander off.'
+			'Just the mere thought of a fight, your knees go weak and you feel yourself being out of breath. Before even the first punch is thrown you raise up your hands and squeak out in fear. "Don''t hurt me, I give up."'
+			'There is just too many of them. "We don''t need to fight. I''m giving up already!" you yell.'
+			'They circle around you, pulling at your hair and calling you names before one of them spits in your face. After that they lose interest and wander off.'
 		elseif fightPStats['Health'] > pcs_health/2:
-			'You are already feeling the pain of the blows, you can''t take it anymore. You throw up your hands, "Please stop! I give up."'
-			'They circle around you pulling at your hair and calling you names before one of them spits in your face. After that they lose interest and wander off.'
+			'You are already feeling the pain of the blows and you can''t take it anymore. You throw up your hands in surrender. "Please stop! I give up."'
+			'They circle around you, pulling at your hair and calling you names before one of them spits in your face. After that they lose interest and wander off.'
 		else
-			'You thought this would be an easy win, but you were mistaken. Blow after blow rains down on you, you are so dazed you can barely see. You stumble and fall to the ground and decide to just stay there, "I give up, I can''t beat you."'
-			'They circle around you pulling at your hair and calling you names before one of them spits in your face. After that they lose interest and wander off.'
+			'You thought this would be an easy win, but you were mistaken. Blow after blow rains down on you and you are so dazed you can barely see. You stumble and fall to the ground and decide to just stay there. "I give up, I can''t beat you."'
+			'They circle around you, pulling at your hair and calling you names before one of them spits in your face. After that they lose interest and wander off.'
 		end
 		*nl
 		'With tears welling up you compose yourself as best as you can and gingerly walk away.'
@@ -764,7 +767,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		pcs_mood -= 20
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/fight/nakedlose.jpg"></center>'
 		'You do your best, you really thought you could beat Christina, but she is just so fast. She hits harder than most guys and worse, someone has trained her how to fight.'
-		'In the end you find you are no match for her, you fall onto your back and hold you hands up to signal your surrender. You know you can''t win at this point so you just lay there.'
+		'In the end you find you are no match for her. You fall onto your back and hold you hands up to signal your surrender. You know you can''t win at this point, so you just lie there.'
 		'Christina smirks at you as you lay there and she pulls her phone back out and takes more pictures of you. "That''s right bitch, I own your ass now, Now roll over and get on your hands and knees." You reluctantly do as she says.'
 
 		act 'Do as she says':
@@ -773,11 +776,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 			christinaphotos = 3
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/christina/beach/onall4s.jpg"></center>'
-			'Now spread those legs so we can get a nice shot of that disgusting pussy and dirty ass of yours." You blush with shame but do as she says, she takes several more pictures laughing the whole time. "You are going to do anything I want any time I say it from now on or everyone in school will see these and I will kick your ass again, right?" You meekly nod on the verge of tears.'
+			'Now spread those legs so we can get a nice shot of that disgusting pussy and dirty ass of yours." You blush with shame but do as she says, she takes several more pictures laughing the whole time. "You are going to do anything I want any time I say it from now on or everyone in school will see these and I will kick your ass again, right?" You meekly nod, on the verge of tears.'
 			*nl
-			'Then you feel a swift kick from behind, between your open legs, as Christina kicks you in the twat hard. You cry out and tears running down your cheeks as you grab your crotch and roll over onto your side with your legs squeezed closed. "Then say it! Say you are a little cunt and will do anything I say anytime I say it." Christina demands as she towers over you.'
+			'Then you feel a swift kick from behind, between your open legs, as Christina kicks you in the twat hard. You cry out and tears start running down your cheeks as you grab your crotch and roll over onto your side with your legs squeezed closed. "Then say it! Say you are a little cunt and will do anything I say anytime I say it." Christina demands as she towers over you.'
 			*nl
-			'You croak out. "I am a little cunt that will do anything you say, anytime you say it." With that Christina laughs with a fairly evil laugh, she seems to be enjoying bullying you a lot, then she and Lina walk off leaving you laying on the beach naked and in pain. Once the walk off you dry your tears as best you can and get up.'
+			'You croak out. "I am a little cunt that will do anything you say, anytime you say it." Christina laughs in an evil and satisfied tone - she seems to be enjoying bullying you a lot. She and Lina then walk off, leaving you laying on the beach naked and in pain. Once they walk off, you dry your tears as best you can and get up.'
 			gs 'pain', 1, 'labia', 'kick'
 
 			act 'Walk off': gt 'gLake'
@@ -792,13 +795,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'surrender':
 		grupvalue[4] -= 5
 		pcs_mood -= 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/street/girlgang.jpg"></center>'
-		'Oh shit! This had obviuslly been a bad idea, and the girls sorrouding you with murder in their eyes are more than willing to show you your error, so... you retreat and lift your hands in defeet waiting for some mercy...'
+		'Oh shit! This was obviously a bad idea, and the girls surrounding you with murder in their eyes are more than willing to show you your error, so... you retreat and lift your hands in defeat, waiting for some mercy...'
 		'"You will piss blood bitch!"'
-		'...or not taking into consideration those words "Banzai!" Suddenlly, a screaming Vanya run towards the bitch squad and sweep their legs with his hockey stick, making them fall, and letting the twins grab your hands and take you away from the brawl turned riot."'
+		'Suddenly, a screaming Vanya runs towards the bitch squad and sweeps their legs with his hockey stick, causing them fall and letting the twins grab your hands and take you away from the brawl turned riot."'
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>! I don''t know what to do with you! What were you thinking?!"'
-		'Demure Katja is really, really pissed and for a long while, she chastizes your actions, but finally, after a long-winded tirade, the redhead seems to deflate and gives you a tired hug.'
+		'Katja is really, really pissed and for a long while, she chastizes your actions, but finally, after a long-winded tirade, the redhead seems to deflate and gives you a tired hug.'
 		'"Please! Don''t do that again!"'
-		'It feels nice and makes Vanya & Vicky spell and sonorous "Kawai!" before quickly turning back and running away from an embarrassed/angry Katja. It was "fun", but it is time to look for something else to do.'
+		'It feels nice and makes Vanya & Vicky spell a sonorous "Kawai!" before quickly turning back and running away from an embarrassed/angry Katja. It was "fun", but it is time to look for something else to do.'
 
 		act 'Continue': gt 'katjaEV', 'kathan'
 	elseif fightEnding = 17:

locations/enderKik.qsrc

@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ killvar'damage'
 if profi = 1:
 	profi = 0
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_speaker.jpg"></center>'
-	'The referee calls you over, it''s time for the announcement...'
+	'The referee calls you over. It''s time for the announcement...'
 
 	act 'Go to the middle for the announcement':
 		if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
@@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ if profi = 1:
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_loss.jpg"></center>'
-			'The referee raises your opponents arm. You''ve lost.'
+			'The referee raises your opponent''s arm. You''ve lost.'
 			KikLossPro += 1
 		end
 
@@ -40,7 +40,7 @@ if profi = 1:
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_loss_ko.jpg"></center>'
-			'All of a sudden the room starts getting darker and darker...'
+			'All of a sudden, the room starts getting darker and darker...'
 			KikLossPro += 1
 			KikLossProKO += 1
 		end
@@ -62,7 +62,7 @@ elseif amateur = 1:
 	amateur = 0
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_speaker.jpg"></center>'
-	'The referee calls you over, it''s time for the announcement...'
+	'The referee calls you over. It''s time for the announcement...'
 
 	act 'Goto the center of the ring for the announcement':
 		if $ARGS[0] = 'win':
@@ -100,7 +100,7 @@ elseif amateur = 1:
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_loss.jpg"></center>'
-			'The referee raises your opponents arm. You''ve lost.'
+			'The referee raises your opponent''s arm. You''ve lost.'
 			KikLossAm += 1
 			if amatReit > 0:amatReit -= 1
 		end
@@ -109,7 +109,7 @@ elseif amateur = 1:
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_loss_ko.jpg"></center>'
-			'All of a sudden the room starts getting darker and darker...'
+			'All of a sudden, the room starts getting darker and darker...'
 			KikLossAm += 1
 			KikLossAmKO += 1
 			if amatReit > 0:amatReit -= 1
@@ -134,7 +134,7 @@ elseif sparing = 1:
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_rival.jpg"></center>'
-		'The fight is over and your rival comes over to you and says, "Nice hustle in the ring."'
+		'The fight is over and your rival comes over to you and says "Nice hustle in the ring."'
 		'You nod and she turns around and heads to the dressing room.'
 	end
 
@@ -142,14 +142,14 @@ elseif sparing = 1:
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_win_ko.jpg"></center>'
-		'The fight is over. And you can hear some of the people quietly comment that you didn''t have to knock her out...'
+		'The fight is over. You can hear some of the people quietly comment that you didn''t have to knock her out...'
 	end
 
 	if $ARGS[0] = 'loss':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_rival.jpg"></center>'
-		'The fight is over and your rival comes over to you and smugly says, "Keep practicing."'
+		'The fight is over and your rival comes over to you and smugly says "Keep practicing."'
 		'You nod and she turns around and heads to the dressing room.'
 	end
 
@@ -157,14 +157,14 @@ elseif sparing = 1:
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_loss_ko.jpg"></center>'
-		'Before you know it you''re laying on the floor and the room starts getting darker and darker...'
+		'Before you know it, you''re laying on the floor and the room starts getting darker and darker...'
 	end
 
 	if $ARGS[0] = 'draw':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/gym/kickboxing/kickboxing_rival.jpg"></center>'
-		'The fight is over and your rival comes over to you and says, "That was pretty close, good fight."'
+		'The fight is over and your rival comes over to you and says "That was pretty close, good fight."'
 		'You nod and she turns around and heads to the dressing room.'
 	end
 

locations/gdksport.qsrc

@@ -45,11 +45,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 			msg'<b><font color = red>You need to get dressed before leaving.</font></b>'
 			gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-		elseif lariskaQwestStart <= daystart and lariskaQwestStart ! 0 and lariskaHelp = 0:
-			lariskaHelp = 1
+		elseif lariskaQwestStart <= daystart and lariskaQwestStart ! 0 and LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = 0:
+			LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = 1
 			gt 'LariskaStart', 'start'
-		elseif lariskaHelp = 1 and lariskaHelp_end = 0 and lariskaQwestDay <= daystart and AlbinaQW['ChristinaHelp'] = 0:
-			lariskaHelp_end = 1
+		elseif LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = 1 and LariskaQW['LariskaHelpEnd'] = 0 and lariskaQwestDay <= daystart:
+			LariskaQW['LariskaHelpEnd'] = 1
 			gt 'LariskaStart', 'end'
 		else
 			gt 'pav_commcenter'
@@ -60,11 +60,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 			msg'<b><font color = red>You need to get dressed before leaving.</font></b>'
 			gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-		elseif lariskaQwestStart <= daystart and lariskaQwestStart ! 0 and lariskaHelp = 0:
-			lariskaHelp = 1
+		elseif lariskaQwestStart <= daystart and lariskaQwestStart ! 0 and LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = 0:
+			LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = 1
 			gt 'LariskaStart', 'start'
-		elseif lariskaHelp = 1 and lariskaHelp_end = 0 and lariskaQwestDay <= daystart and AlbinaQW['ChristinaHelp'] = 0:
-			lariskaHelp_end = 1
+		elseif LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = 1 and LariskaQW['LariskaHelpEnd'] = 0 and lariskaQwestDay <= daystart:
+			LariskaQW['LariskaHelpEnd'] = 1
 			gt 'LariskaStart', 'end'
 		else
 			gt 'gdktoilet', 'start'
@@ -88,13 +88,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	if pcs_stam > 20 and $clothingworntype = 'exercise' and $shoeworntype = 'trainers' and hour < 18:
 		if gsAboBeg > 0 and npc_pregtalk['A131'] = 0:
-			act 'Take a track lesson, you have <<gsAboBeg>> lessons remaining': gt 'gdksport', 'racing2'
+			act 'Take a track lesson. You have <<gsAboBeg>> lessons remaining': gt 'gdksport', 'racing2'
 		end
 		if gsAboVolley > 0 and volleysostav = 0 and npc_pregtalk['A69'] = 0:
 			if week ! 5:
-				act 'Take a volleyball lesson, you have <<gsAboVolley>> lessons remaining': gt 'gdksport', 'vball2'
+				act 'Take a volleyball lesson. You have <<gsAboVolley>> lessons remaining': gt 'gdksport', 'vball2'
 			else
-				act 'Take a volleyball lesson, you have <<gsAboVolley>> lessons remaining': gt 'gdksport', 'vball3'
+				act 'Take a volleyball lesson. You have <<gsAboVolley>> lessons remaining': gt 'gdksport', 'vball3'
 			end
 		end
 		if volleysostav > 0:
@@ -230,7 +230,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dance2':
 		if rand(0, 1) = 0:'You see something <a href="exec: gt ''danceGev''">interesting</a>.'
 		gs 'stat'
 	else
-		'There is nothing you can learn from this dance class with your current skill, you need to find a new teacher or travel to the city to find better dance classes if you wish to improve further.'
+		'There is nothing you can learn from this dance class with your current skill. You need to find a new teacher or travel to the city to find better dance classes if you wish to improve further.'
 
 		if rand(0, 1) = 0:
 			'You see something <a href="exec: gt ''danceGev''">interesting</a>.'
@@ -244,193 +244,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dance2':
 	end
 end
 
-! if $ARGS[0] = 'albina1':
-! 	menu_off = 1
-! 	*clr & cla
-! 	numnpc = 23
-! 	$static_num = 'A23'
-! 	gs 'stat'
-! 	'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 	'At the end of the class, a few girls enter the dance studio, including Albina Barlovskaya. You''ve seen Albina around, but you know almost nothing about her.'
-
-! 	act 'Say hello to Albina':
-! 		*clr & cla
-! 		gs 'stat'
-! 		'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 		'You approach Albina and say hello. She raised an eyebrow haughtily.'
-! 		'"And you are? Oh yeah <<$pcs_nickname>>. You''ve taken up dancing, have you?" You nodded confirming the obvious. Albina laughed dismissively. "Well, how''s that going for you?"'
-! 		'"Not bad." You answer her coldly, "Not bad at all."'
-! 		'Albina gave you an arrogant look, "Not bad? Well, maybe in comparison with other local bowlegged cows, but I doubt that you can dance on a professional level."'
-
-! 		act 'I do not care':
-! 			*clr & cla
-! 			npc_rel['A23'] -= 5
-! 			gs 'stat'
-! 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 			'You replied to Albina as scornfully as possible that you do not care and turned away from her.'
-! 			'She snickered nastily then said to the other girls, "Alright, girls. Let''s get to work."'
-
-! 			act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-! 		end
-
-! 		act 'I know how to dance':
-! 			*clr & cla
-! 			gs 'stat'
-! 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 			'Albina''s arrogance was getting on your nerves so you told her. "I know how to dance."'
-! 			'Albina turned to you with a sneer and said, "You can sit and see how professionals do it. Then we''ll see if you still think you can dance."'
-! 			'Turning to the other girls, she said, "Alright girls, Let''s get to work!"'
-
-! 			act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-! 			act 'Watch': gt 'gdksport', 'albina4'
-! 		end
-! 	end
-! end
-
-! if $ARGS[0] = 'albina2':
-! 	menu_off = 1
-! 	*clr & cla
-! 	numnpc = 23
-! 	$static_num = 'A23'
-! 	gs 'stat'
-! 	'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 	'At the end of the class, a few girls enter the dance studio, including Albina Barlovskaya. You know Albina from school and you have a pretty good relationship.'
-
-! 	act 'Say hello to Albina':
-! 		*clr & cla
-! 		gs 'stat'
-! 		'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 		'You approached Albina and said hello. She turned to you and smiled.'
-! 		'"Oh, hello, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I didn''t know you started dancing. Are you any good?" Albina asked with interest.'
-! 		'"I''m pretty good, I think." you replied with an answering smile, "Even if I do say so myself."'
-! 		'"Pretty good, huh?" Albina answered with in a condescending tone, "Well, I''ve seen some of the dancers that take lessons here. It wouldn''t take much to be better them those bow-legged cows. I doubt you''re up to any kind of professional standard though."'
-
-! 		act 'I do not care':
-! 			*clr & cla
-! 			npc_rel['A23'] -= 5
-! 			gs 'stat'
-! 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 			'Offended by her tone, you replied to Albina as scornfully as possible, "I couldn''t care less what you think."'
-! 			'As you walked away, she snickered nastily then said to the other girls, "Alright, girls. Let''s get to work."'
-
-! 			act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-! 		end
-
-! 		act 'I know how to dance':
-! 			*clr & cla
-! 			gs 'stat'
-! 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 			'Albina''s tone offended you and you replied hotly, "I can dance as well as any of these girls."'
-! 			'Albina turned to you with a look of disbelief and said, "You can sit and see how professionals do it. Then we''ll see if you still think you can dance."'
-! 			'Turning to the other girls, she said, "Alright girls, Let''s get to work!"'
-
-! 			act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-! 			act 'Watch': gt 'gdksport', 'albina4'
-! 		end
-! 	end
-! end
-
-! if $ARGS[0] = 'albina3':
-! 	menu_off = 1
-! 	*clr & cla
-! 	numnpc = 23
-! 	$static_num = 'A23'
-! 	gs 'stat'
-! 	'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 	'At the end of the class, a few girls enter the dance studio, including Albina Barlovskaya. You know Albina from school and you have a very close relationship.'
-
-! 	act 'Say hello to Albina':
-! 		*clr & cla
-! 		gs 'stat'
-! 		'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 		'You approached Albina and said hello. She turned to you and smiled.'
-! 		'"Oh, hello, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I forget you told me you started dancing. Are you any good?" Albina asked with interest.'
-! 		'"I''m pretty good, I think." you replied with an answering smile, "Even if I do say so myself."'
-! 		'"Pretty good, huh?" Albina answered with laugh, "Well, I''ve seen some of the dancers that take lessons here. It wouldn''t take much to be better them those bow-legged cows. Do you think you''re up to any kind of professional level?"'
-
-! 		act 'Not really':
-! 			*clr & cla
-! 			npc_rel['A23'] -= 5
-! 			gs 'stat'
-! 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 			'Unsure of yourself, you relied hesitantly, "I couldn''t really say, I''ve never really thought about it."'
-! 			'"Well, you keep working at it, maybe you''ll get there someday." then she turned and said to the other girls, "Alright, girls. Let''s get to work."'
-
-! 			act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-! 		end
-
-! 		act 'I know how to dance':
-! 			*clr & cla
-! 			gs 'stat'
-! 			'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npc_firstname[''A23'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A23'']>></font></b></center>'
-! 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big23.jpg"></center>'
-! 			'"I''d like to think I can dance as good as anyone, even a professional." you replied honestly.'
-! 			'Albina turned to you with a look of consideration and said, "You can sit and see how professionals do it. Then we''ll see if you still think you can dance."'
-! 			'Turning to the other girls, she said, "Alright girls, Let''s get to work!"'
-
-! 			act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-! 			act 'Watch': gt 'gdksport', 'albina4'
-! 		end
-! 	end
-! end
-
-! if $ARGS[0] = 'albina4':
-! 	menu_off = 1
-! 	*clr & cla
-! 	numnpc = 23
-! 	$static_num = 'A23'
-! 	minut += 15
-! 	gs 'stat'
-! 	'The girls turned on their stereo and started dancing. It immediately became clear to you that they dance very well and professionally. Probably even better than you. Albina herself dances much better than you. It was also clear that they have practiced this routine many times as their movements were closely synchronized with no wasted effort.'
-! 	'When the music ended, Albina said, "Girls, take a little break."'
-! 	'She came to you and said a little breathlessly, "You see, we are pros, real dancers. We are the dance troupe "The Starlets". We do shows on holidays and have even been in a music video."'
-
-! 	act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-
-! 	if pregtime >= 90:
-! 		'Maybe after you''ve had your child you might try out for them.'
-! 	else
-! 		act 'Ask if you can join':
-! 			*clr & cla
-! 			minut += 15
-! 			gs 'stat'
-! 			'You asked to join the dance group. Albina grinned, "Can you? We all worked hard to get here so you''ll have to prove yourself. Show us that you know how to dance." Albina started the music and girls gathered to watch you dance.'
-
-! 			act 'Dance':
-! 				*clr & cla
-! 				minut += 5
-! 				if pcs_inhib < 40:inhib_exp += rand(1,2)
-! 				gs 'stat'
-! 				'You began to dance to the music, trying as hard as you could to impress them. When the music stopped you came Albina.'
-! 				'"You dance like a country bumpkin, of course, but you do have some potential." Albina mused as you stood panting before her.'
-
-! 				act 'Will you take me for your team?':
-! 					*clr & cla
-! 					AlbinaQW['StarletsJoined'] = 1
-! 					minut += 5
-! 					gs 'stat'
-! 					'"Well, am I good enough to join the troupe?" you asked Albina.'
-! 					'Albina thought about it and looked at the other girls; some nodded, others shrugged.'
-! 					'Finally she answered you, "Okay, we''ll take a shot. Maybe you''ll learn something and be worthwhile."'
-
-! 					act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
-! 				end
-! 			end
-! 		end
-! 	end
-! end
-
 if $ARGS[0] = 'racing2':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
@@ -578,7 +391,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vball5':
 !	loopcount = 0
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/gdksport.jpg"></center>'
-	'The tournament starts at 19:00. Your bus departs at 18:00. You gathered your things together with the rest of the team and got on a bus that took you to the out of town match.'
+	'The tournament starts at 19:00. Your bus departs at 18:00. You gather your things together with the rest of the team and get on a bus that takes you to the out of town match.'
 	act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 	act 'Get on bus and go to play':
 		volltime = 0
@@ -642,13 +455,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'volley':
 
 		if volpointv = 0:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/teacher/mikhail/volleytrener6.jpg"></center>'
-			'Coach tells the team that you can''t relax, though winning you still need to be focused and not let the opponents back into the game.'
+			'Coach tells the team that you can''t relax. "Although we''re winning, you still need to be focused! Don''t let the enemy back into the game!"'
 		elseif volpoint = 0:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/teacher/mikhail/volleytrener2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Coach tells the team that losing the first half is bad, but it''s not a disaster, you pick yourselves up and go out and kick their asses. You can still win this game in the second half.'
+			'Coach tells the team that losing the first half is bad, but it''s not a disaster. "You pick yourselves up and go out and kick their asses. You can still win this game in the second half."'
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/teacher/mikhail/volleytrener1.jpg"></center>'
-			'Coach tells the team that there is no draws in volleyball, he expects you to keep doing the things that you are doing well, but increase pressure. With more discipline and toughness, you can win this game. '
+			'Coach tells the team that there is no draws in volleyball, he expects you to keep doing the things that you are doing well, but increase pressure. "With more discipline and toughness, you can win this game!"'
 		end
 
 		if volleysostav = 1:
@@ -705,7 +518,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'volley':
 			!! you came in and your team gave up a point they would not have without you
 			if volleysostav = 2 and volpoint = 1:npc_rel['A69'] -= 5
 		else
-			'The scoring varies one way, then the other, obviously the teams are evenly matched.'
+			'The scoring varies one way, then the other. The teams are obviously evenly matched.'
 
 			!! you came in and your team tied when they would have lost without you
 			if volleysostav = 2 and volpointv = 1:npc_rel['A69'] += 5
@@ -742,7 +555,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'volley':
 			if rand (0, 1) = 0:
 				volsesonwin += 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/game7.jpg"></center>'
-				'The match was very close, but in the end your team pulls of a win.'
+				'The match was very close, but in the end your team pulls off a win.'
 			else
 				volsesonloss += 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/game7.jpg"></center>'
@@ -770,8 +583,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shower':
 
 	if IvanShowerYes = 1 and rand(0,3) = 1 and ShowerIvan < 3:
 		if ShowerIvan = 1: ShowerIvan = 2
-		'You entered the women''s shower, turning the water on you began to lather up your body with a washcloth. Suddenly, you hear the door creak as it opened and you remember that you agreed not to lock it for Ivan.'
-		'You looked around and see Ivan Prokhorov standing there looking at you. "Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>. The men''s shower is full, so I thought I would join you instead." Ivan smiled after these words.'
+		'You enter the women''s shower, and turning the water on, you begin to lather up your body with a washcloth. Suddenly, you hear the door creak open and you remember that you agreed not to lock it for Ivan.'
+		'You look around and see Ivan standing there looking at you. "Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>. The men''s shower is full, so I thought I would join you instead." he smiles.'
 		act 'Shower with Ivan': gt 'gdksport', 'ShowerWithIvan'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -791,8 +604,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shower':
 		end
 	elseif kotovVSprohorov = 1 and ShowerIvan < 3:
 		kotovVSprohorov = 2
-		'You enter the women''s shower and turning the water on begin to lather your body with a washcloth. Suddenly, you hear the door creak as it opened and you remember that you forgot to lock it.'
-		'You looked around and saw Ivan Prokhorov standing in the doorway looking at you. "Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. Can I join you? The men''s shower is full." Ivan smiled after these words.'
+		'You enter the women''s shower and turning the water on, begin to lather your body with a washcloth. Suddenly, you hear the door creak open and you remember that you forgot to lock it.'
+		'You look around and see Ivan standing in the doorway looking at you. "Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. Can I join you? The men''s shower is full." he smiles.'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 			act 'Throw Ivan out (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -802,7 +615,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shower':
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/ivan/sex/community/shower1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You cover your breasts with one hand and turn sideways crossing your legs as you hurl your washcloth at Ivan. He easily dodged the flying cloth and laughs as he exits the shower room.'
+				'You cover your breasts with one hand and turn sideways crossing your legs as you hurl your washcloth at Ivan. He easily dodges the flying cloth and laughs as he exits the shower room.'
 				'You quickly lock the door, before finishing your shower in peace.'
 				act 'Get out of the shower': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 			end
@@ -814,7 +627,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shower':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/ivan/shower2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You''re completely surprised and confused by Ivan''s sudden appearance, you are struck speechless. Ivan takes your inaction and silence as consent, as he walks into the shower room and closes the door behind him.'
+			'Completely surprised and confused by Ivan''s sudden appearance, you are struck speechless. Ivan takes your inaction and silence as consent, and he walks into the shower room and closes the door behind him.'
 			
 			gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist', 'hard'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -838,7 +651,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shower':
 			end
 		end
 	else
-		'You enter the women''s shower and turning the water on begin to lather your body with a washcloth. After you rinsed off the soap, you washed your hair with shampoo. Next you rinsed out the shampoo out of your hair and feel completely clean.'
+		'You enter the women''s shower and turning the water on begin to lather your body with a washcloth. After you rinse off the soap, you wash your hair. You then rinse your hair and feel completely clean.'
 		if (trenerlust >= 40 or trenersex = 1) and rand(0,3) = 0 and VoltrenerVoyeur = 0:
 			act 'Continue': gt 'VoltrenerSexShower', '0'
 		elseif (trenerlust >= 40 or trenersex = 1) and rand(0,3) = 0 and VoltrenerVoyeur = 1:
@@ -857,16 +670,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ShowerWithIvan':
 	menu_off = 1
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/bathroom/dush.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Ivan walks over to you, pulling his boxer shorts and stepping out of them as they fall around his ankles. Stepping into the shower with you, getting himself wet under the shower. His muscular body was very close to yours.'
-	'You tried not to look at him but your eyes involuntarily dropped to his groin where his thick cock hung and swung as he moved. Ivan seeing where you were looking winked, "Want to wash me?"'
+	'Ivan walks over to you, pulling his boxer shorts down and stepping out of them as they fall around his ankles. Stepping into the shower with you, getting himself wet under the water. His muscular body is very close to yours.'
+	'You try not to look at him, but your eyes involuntarily drop to his groin where his thick cock swings as he moves. Ivan, seeing where you are looking winks. "Want to wash me?"'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Lather Ivan':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A3'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/ivan/sex/community/shower.jpg"></center>'
-		'You took your washcloth and began to lather Ivan''s body. As you move around him, you can''t help but notice his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock began to rise up and getting hard, you feel it brush against your thigh.'
-		'Ivan begins to rubs his hands over your body and caress you with his hands. After a few moments you feel his hands on your shoulders as he gentle but firmly pushes you down to your knees.'
+		'You take your washcloth and begin to lather Ivan''s body. As you move around him, you can''t help but notice his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock begin to rise up and get hard. You feel it brush against your thigh.'
+		'Ivan begins to rubs his hands over your body and caress you. After a few minutes, you feel his hands on your shoulders as he gently but firmly pushes you down to your knees.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Give blowjob':
@@ -875,19 +688,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ShowerWithIvan':
 			if npc_Sex['A3'] = 0: npc_Sex['A3'] = 1 & guy += 1
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/ivan/sex/community/shover.jpg"></center>'
-			'You slowly sink to your knees in front of Ivan and his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in front of your face. Ivan leaned forward probing impatiently with the head of his cock against your lips. Your mouth opens almost against your will and you let his cock slide in your mouth.'
-			'Your lips tightly wrapped around Ivan''s solid rod and you sucked him as the streams of warm water wash over you. Suddenly Ivan pulled his dick out of your mouth and takes you by the hand, pulling you back up to your feet. He brought his lips to your breast and began to suck on your nipple.'
-			'Bliss sweeps over you as he suckles your stiff nipple. Releasing your nipple with a wet pop, Ivan pushed you back onto your knees and bent you backwards as he straddles your face, once again sliding his hot cock into your mouth. He began pushing it deeper into your throat.'
+			'You slowly sink to your knees in front of Ivan and his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock is in front of your face. Ivan leans forward, probing impatiently with the head of his cock against your lips. Your mouth opens almost against your will and you let his cock slide in your mouth.'
+			'Your lips tightly wrap around Ivan''s solid rod and you suck him as the streams of warm water wash over you. Suddenly Ivan pulls his dick out of your mouth and takes you by the hand, pulling you back up to your feet. He brings his lips to your breast and begins to suck on your nipple.'
+			'Bliss sweeps over you as he suckles your stiff nipple. Releasing your nipple with a wet pop, Ivan pushes you back onto your knees and bends you backwards as he straddles your face, once again sliding his hot cock into your mouth. He begins pushing it deeper into your throat.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Allow him to continue':
 				cla & *clr
 				if pcs_throat < 15:
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/shower6.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'Penetrating further and further into your mouth, then into your throat, his member blocked your breath, which caused a gag reflex, nearly causing you to vomit. Freeing your mouth from his dick and wiping your tears, you screamed at Ivan, "This isn''t some bottomless hole for you to shove your dick into, you know!" Ivan gave you a guilty look then he pulled you back to your feet again as he began to kiss you, caress your breasts and ass until you began to moan with desire. He turned you around then bent you over with your ass towards him.'
+					'Penetrating further and further into your mouth, then into your throat, his member blocks your breath, which causes a gag reflex, nearly causing you to vomit. Freeing your mouth from his dick and wiping your tears, you scream at him. "This isn''t some bottomless hole for you to shove your dick into, you know!" Ivan gives you a guilty look then pulls you back to your feet again as he begins to kiss you and caress your breasts and ass until you begin to moan with desire. He turns you around and bends you over.'
 				else
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/shower7.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'Penetrating further and further into your mouth, then into your throat, you take his member to the root without any problems and without causing you discomfort, and bringing Ivan "heavenly delight", if his groans and moans were any indication. Feeling that your classmate would flood your throat with his seed at any moment, you pulled your mouth off of his cock and turned and bent over, presenting your ass to Ivan. You also wanted some satisfaction.'
+					'Penetrating further and further into your mouth, then into your throat, you take his member to the base without any problems and without causing you discomfort, bringing Ivan "heavenly delight" if his groans and moans are any indication. Feeling that your classmate would flood your throat with his seed at any moment, you pull your mouth off of his cock and turn and bend over, presenting your ass to him. You also want some satisfaction.'
 				end
 
 				if agape > 0:
@@ -898,13 +711,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ShowerWithIvan':
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/mouth/cum49.jpg"></center>'
-						'Bent over, expecting to feel his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock against your pussy at any moment, you are momentarily surprised when you feel Ivan cock pressed up against your asshole.'
-						'Thinking he was unaware you speak up. "Ivan that''s my asshole." You hear Ivan snort. "Yeah I know." And with those words he pushes the head of his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in your ass. You moan in a mixture of pain and pleasure.'
-						'He takes it slow, giving you time to adjust to his dick invading your ass. Once your moans turn more to ones of pleasure then pain, he slips it in deeper, slowly working himself balls deep in your ass.'
-						'Once there he begins stroking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock faster and faster in your ass. Soon his skin is slapping against your bare ass, as he pounds you hard and fast.'
-						'One of your hands rubs your clit while the other one stays against the wall to brace yourself. He has amazing stamina a seemingly endless supply. No matter how much you love him fucking your ass, after awhile you feel your ass beginning to get sore, your moans of pleasure start to turn into grunts of pain.'
-						'Apparently sensing your growing discomfort he makes one more powerful thrust with a grunt then pulls out of your ass. He pulls you around and pushes you back down to your knees, he pushes his cock back in your mouth. You try to ignore the taste of his cock, considering just where it was.'
-						'You do you best to suck him off quickly. With in moments he is shooting his sperm in your mouth. Once he is done he goes back to showering, he quickly finishes up and starts to get dressed. He watches you as you get dressed. "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, we should do that again sometime." Without waiting for a reply he leaves the shower.'
+						'Bent over, expecting to feel his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock against your pussy at any moment, you are momentarily surprised when you feel it pressed up against your asshole.'
+						'Thinking he is unaware you speak up. "Wrong hole Ivan!" Ivan just snorts in response. "Yeah I know." He then pushes the head of his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your ass. You moan in a mixture of pain and pleasure.'
+						'He takes it slow, giving you time to adjust to his dick invading your ass. Once your moans turn more to ones of pleasure then pain, he slips it in deeper, slowly working himself balls deep into your ass.'
+						*nl
+						'Once there he begins stroking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock faster and faster in your ass. Soon, his skin is slapping against your bare ass as he pounds you hard and fast.'
+						'One of your hands rubs your clit while the other one stays against the wall to brace yourself. He has amazing stamina in a seemingly endless supply. No matter how much you love him fucking your ass, after a while you feel your ass beginning to get sore, your moans of pleasure start to turn into grunts of pain.'
+						'Apparently sensing your growing discomfort, he makes one more powerful thrust with a grunt then pulls out of your ass. He pulls you around and pushes you back down to your knees before he slides his cock back in your mouth. You try to ignore the taste of his cock, considering just where it just was.'
+						'You do you best to suck him off quickly and within moments, he is shooting his sperm into your mouth. Once he is done, he goes back to showering, quickly finishing up and starting to get dressed. He watches you as you get dressed. "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, we should do that again sometime." Without waiting for a reply, he leaves the room.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'sub', 'rough'
 						gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5
 						minut -= 5
@@ -930,10 +744,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ShowerWithIvan':
 						end
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/vag/doggy/shover2.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'As you bend over, you feel Ivan''s hand stroking your ass and his finger starts to massage your anus. You are momentarily surprised when you feel his fingers pressed up against your asshole. Thinking he was unaware you speak up. "Ivan that''s my asshole."'
-						'You hear Ivan snort. "Yeah I know." And with those words he pushes the head of his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in your ass. You moan in a mixture of pain and pleasure. He takes it slow, giving you time to adjust to his dick invading your ass.'
-						'Once your moans turn more to ones of pleasure then pain, he slips it in deeper, slowly working himself balls deep in your ass. Once there he begins stroking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock faster and faster in your ass. Soon his skin is slapping against your bare ass, as he pounds you hard and fast.'
-						'One of your hands rubs your clit while the other one stays against the wall to brace yourself. He has amazing stamina a seemingly endless supply. For awhile you buck your hips back against him, fucking him as much as he was fucking you, but no matter how much you love him fucking your ass, after awhile you feel your ass beginning to get sore.'
+						'As you bend over, you feel Ivan''s hand stroking your ass and his finger starts to massage your anus. You are momentarily surprised when you feel his fingers pressed up against your asshole. Thinking he is unaware you speak up. "That''s my <i>other</i> hole Ivan..."'
+						'Ivan just snorts in response. "Yeah I know." He then pushes the head of his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your ass. You moan in a mixture of pain and pleasure. He takes it slow, giving you time to adjust to his dick invading your ass.'
+						'Once your moans turn more to ones of pleasure then pain, he slips it in deeper, slowly working himself balls deep in your ass. Once there he begins stroking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock faster and faster in your ass. Soon, his skin is slapping against your bare ass as he pounds you hard and fast.'
+						'One of your hands rubs your clit while the other one stays against the wall to brace yourself. He has amazing stamina in a seemingly endless supply. For a while, you buck your hips back against him, fucking him as much as he is fucking you, but no matter how much you love him fucking your ass, after a while you feel your ass beginning to get sore.'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'sub', 'rough'
 						gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5
@@ -954,8 +768,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ShowerWithIvan':
 									$orgasm_txt = 'Your whole body contracts and then you cry out in orgasm.'
 								end
 							end
-							'Your moans of pleasure start to turn into grunts of pain. Apparently sensing your growing discomfort he makes one more powerful thrust with a grunt. His body spasms against yours as you feel him cumming in your ass. Once he is done he pulls out of your ass and goes back to showering, he quickly finishes up and starts to get dressed.'
-							'He watches you as you get dressed. "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, we should do that again sometime." Without waiting for a reply he leaves the shower.'
+							'Your moans of pleasure start to turn into grunts of pain. Apparently sensing your growing discomfort, he makes one more powerful thrust with a grunt. His body spasms against yours as you feel him cumming in your ass. Once he is done he pulls out of you and goes back to showering, quickly finishing up and starting to get dressed.'
+							'He watches you as you get dressed. "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, we should do that again sometime." Without waiting for a reply, he leaves the room.'
 							cumspclnt = 1
 							gs 'cum_cleanup'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -973,7 +787,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ShowerWithIvan':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/ivan/sex/community/shower1.jpg"></center>'
 					'Ivan pauses for a brief second and you use the chance to quickly stand up and jump out of the shower.'
-					'You look back at him and say, "I think you''ve had enough of me for today. Maybe you can have more next time."'
+					'You look back at him and say "I think you''ve had enough of me for today. Maybe you can have more next time."'
 					act 'Get out of the shower': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 				end
 			else
@@ -991,7 +805,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Ivan_bored':
 	pcs_horny += 10
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/ivan/school/ivan2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You look at Ivan for a long moment and bite your lower lip and then whisper just loud enough he can barely hear you. "I''m bored." He looks at you a moment then smiles, he looks around, then takes you by the hand and leads you away from the others, into one of the lesser used area''s of the school. He stops at one of the boys restrooms, going inside and leaving you outside. A few moments later two younger boys are ushered out by Ivan and sent packing. He watches them go, once they round the corner he pulls you into the bathroom.'
+	'You look at Ivan for a long moment and bite your lower lip and then whisper just loud enough that he can barely hear you. "I''m bored..." He looks at you for a moment then smiles. He looks around, then takes you by the hand and leads you away from the others, into one of the lesser used areas of the school. He stops at one of the boys restrooms, going inside and leaving you outside. A few moments later, two younger boys are sent packing by Ivan. Once they round the corner, he pulls you into the bathroom.'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'anal', 'resist'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -1011,9 +825,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Ivan_bored':
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A3'
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/ivan/sex/school/bbivanbj.jpg"></center>'
-		'Once inside Ivan starts to kiss you passionately while pulling your clothes off and tossing them all over, you return his kiss and help remove your clothes. He backs up pulling you along into one of the stalls with him. Once your clothes are removed he starts removing his own clothes, which you are only to happy to help with. Once you''re both fully naked, he sits down on the toilet and gently pushes you down to your knees.'
-		'He guides your head to his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock, using one of your hands you grab his dick and start to stroke the shaft while you open your mouth and take his dick into your mouth. You wrap your lips tightly around his shaft and start sucking him, while using your tongue to tease the head. You alternate your hand from stroking him and fondling his balls.'
-		'He moans and grabs your hair, you can feel he is restraining himself from forcing your head down and jamming his dick down your throat. After a couple of minutes, he growls a bit and stands up, pulling you up as well. Without explaining he turns you around so quickly you almost stumble, only his strong hands on you keep you from falling into the stall wall. He roughly bends you over, using one hand to guide his cock the other grabs your butt cheek to spread it open.'
+		'Once inside, Ivan starts to kiss you passionately while pulling your clothes off and tossing them all over. You return his kiss and help remove your clothes. He backs up, pulling you into one of the stalls. Once your clothes are removed he starts removing his own clothes, which you are only to happy to help with. Once you''re both fully naked, he sits down on the toilet and gently pushes you down to your knees.'
+		'He guides your head to his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock. Using one of your hands you grab his dick and start to stroke the shaft while you open your mouth and take his dick into your mouth. You wrap your lips tightly around his shaft and start sucking him, while using your tongue to tease the head. You alternate your hand from stroking him and fondling his balls.'
+		'He moans and grabs your hair, you can feel he is restraining himself from forcing your head down and jamming his dick down your throat. After a couple of minutes, he growls a bit and stands up, pulling you up as well. Without explaining he turns you around so quickly you almost stumble, only his strong hands on you keep you from falling into the stall wall. He roughly bends you over, using one hand to guide his cock while the other grabs your butt cheek to spread it open.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5, 'sub'
 		gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'dom'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
@@ -1040,6 +854,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Ivan_bored':
 			'He rubs the tip of his dick against your asshole for a couple of moments and then you feel a sharp pain as he pushes it in. With only your saliva as lubrication, it doesn''t slide in as easily. You bite your lip and cry out a little in pain. He relaxes a little and rubs your back as he takes it slow, giving you time to stretch and adjust to his cock invading your ass.'
 			'He slowly strokes his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in your ass, with each stroke pushing it just a little deeper in your ass. Once he is about half way in your moans turn from pain to pleasure, while one of your hands starts rubbing your clit. You start moaning louder and panting, your pussy is now soaking wet. After a couple of minutes the pleasure is building up inside of your body so much you no longer even need to stimulate your clitorous any longer. "Fuck <<$pcs_nickname>>, you not only have the hottest ass of any girls in school, but the tightest one I have ever fucked." Ivan says as he can tell your getting into it, grabbing your hips with both hands. He drives himself balls deep into your ass, eliciting a squeak of pain from you, but sensation of pain is quickly overwhelmed by pleasure.'
 			'Holding onto your hips with both hands, he holds you steady and keeps you from pulling away, as he jack hammers his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock balls deep in your ass. You moan in pain and pleasure, mostly pleasure, the sounds of your moans, almost drowned out the sounds of his skin slapping against yours, his balls slapping against your wet pussy. You place your hands against the stall wall to keep him from driving your head into it, from his powerful and violent thrusts. As he abuses your poor little asshole, you find yourself loving every second of it.'
+			*nl
 			'You have an intense orgasm that leaves your legs shaking and barely able to keep standing. You are almost to the point where you are unable to take it anymore, either from the intense pleasure or the growing burning sensation in your ass. Either way the matter is moot, as Ivan drives himself once more balls deep into your ass, but this time holds himself there. You feel his cock twitching as he shoots hot sperm deep in your ass, spurt after spurt filling you up with his semen in what seems an almost unending stream. Finally he takes a shuddering breath and pulls out of you, leaving you to almost collapse with out his support.'
 			'You both start to get dressed, him faster than you, as your still unsteady on your feet, from your shaky legs. Once he is done getting dressed he helps you gather the rest of your clothes from where he tossed them aside. As you are seeing to the final adjustments of your clothes he goes to the bathroom door and looks out both ways down the hall, motioning you over just as the class bell rings. Oh well, at least you have a good excuse to be a little late, you think to yourself with a smile.'
 			'As you start to go out the door, he stops you and squeezes your ass with his strong hand and says. "That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>, you are coolest chick in school, not to mention the hottest. Maybe we can do this again sometime soon, or maybe I will come see you in the shower at the community center some night, maybe even tonight." He grins and winks at you, giving your ass a hard slap, as he rushes off to class. You only have time to nod in agreement to his idea of doing this again, you bite your lip as you watch him go. You have mixed feelings about this, Ivan is a great guy and a lot of fun, but you know he doesn''t want a girlfriend. He just wants to be friends with benefits, but is that enough for you? You don''t have time to think on it more as you hurry to class.'
@@ -1064,9 +879,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Fedor First Date':
 	'<center><b><h4><font color="blue"><<"Fyodor [Fedor] Kozlov">></font></h4></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big5.jpg"></center>'
 	if fedorkozbreak = 1:
-		'You enter the sports club and see Fyodor Kozlov, standing by the front door. He looks as though he is waiting for someone and as soon as he sees you, he flashes you a smile and he approaches with an affable smile on his face. "Hello <<$pcs_firstname>>." he says with a warm smile. He pauses for a moment then reaches into his pockets and pulls out 2 tickets and says, "Here is the deal ... I know that we had a bit of a bumpy relationship before but I would like to try again if you will. So what do you say? Wanna go on another date with me?'
+		'You enter the sports club and see Fedor standing by the front door. He looks as though he is waiting for someone and as soon as he sees you, he flashes you a smile and he approaches with an affable smile on his face. "Hello <<$pcs_firstname>>." he says with a warm smile. He pauses for a moment, then reaches into his pockets and pulls out 2 tickets and says "Here is the deal. I know that we had a bit of a bumpy relationship before, but I would like to try again if you will. So what do you say? Wanna go on another date with me?"'
 	else
-		'You enter the sports club and see Fyodor Kozlov, standing by the front door. He looks as though he is waiting for someone and as soon as he sees you, his eyes light up and he approaches you with an affable smile on his face. "Hello <<$pcs_firstname>>." he says with a warm smile. He pauses for a moment then reaches into his pockets and pulls out 2 tickets and says, "Here is the deal ... I have an extra ticket to the movies and I would like know if you would be up for a good comedy?"'
+		'You enter the sports club and see Fedor standing by the front door. He looks as though he is waiting for someone and as soon as he sees you, his eyes light up and he approaches you with an affable smile on his face. "Hello <<$pcs_firstname>>." he says with a warm smile. He pauses for a moment, then reaches into his pockets and pulls out 2 tickets and says "Here is the deal. I have an extra ticket to the movies and I would like know if you would be up for a good comedy?"'
 	end
 
 	act 'Agree':
@@ -1074,7 +889,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Fedor First Date':
 		minut += 15
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/fedor/fedorev/park/walk.jpg"></center>'
-		'"I would like that." you said with a smile and Fedor responds: "Good, I hear that this movie will have us in stiches." with a delighted look on his face as he wraps his arm around yours then walks you to the movie theater.'
+		'"I would like that." you say with a smile and Fedor responds: "Good, I hear that this movie will have us in stiches." With a delighted look on his face, he wraps his arm around yours then walks you to the movie theater.'
 
 		act 'Watch a movie':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -1082,7 +897,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Fedor First Date':
 			pcs_mood += 90
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/cinema/kino_1.jpg"></center>'
-			'Fedor presents the tickets at the entrance and together you walked into the theater. You look around and notice that the seats were mostly empty so Fedor leads you to the front row and both got seated. The lights dim then the movie starts. Fedor sits motionless and only occasionally glancing at you. The movie was quite interesting and you couldn''t help but laugh occasionally at the wackiness of the movie. When the movie ends, the lights turn on and Fedor walks you out. "<<$pcs_firstname>>. You seem like a cool girl. Maybe we could go out together. What do you say?"'
+			'Fedor presents the tickets at the entrance and together you walk into the theater. You look around and notice that the seats are mostly empty, so Fedor leads you to the front row and you both sit down. The lights dim and the movie starts. Fedor sits motionless and only occasionally glances at you. The movie was quite interesting and you couldn''t help but laugh occasionally at the wackiness of it. When the movie ends, the lights turn on and Fedor walks you out. "<<$pcs_firstname>>. You seem like a cool girl. Maybe we could go out together. What do you say?"'
 
 			act 'Agree':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -1091,7 +906,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Fedor First Date':
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/fedor/fedorev/park/walk.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Sure, I would love to go out with you." you replied. Fedor was visibly delighted "Alright I look forward to hanging out with you again. Whenever you are up for another date then meet me in the school yard, after school." Fedor says as he walks you back home. The two of you have fun discussing your favorite movies as you continue your way home.'
+				'"Sure, I would love to go out with you." you reply and Fedor is visibly delighted. "Alright, I look forward to hanging out with you again. Whenever you are up for another date then meet me in the school yard, after school." Fedor says as he walks you back home. The two of you have fun discussing your favorite movies as you continue your way home.'
 
 				act 'Leave': gt 'pav_residential'
 			end
@@ -1106,9 +921,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Fedor First Date':
 				'<center><b><h4><font color="blue"><<"Fyodor [Fedor] Kozlov">></font></h4></b></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/fedor/fedorev/fedorsad.jpg"></center>'
 				if fedorkozbreak = 1:
-					'You say to Fedor "Sorry Fedor but I don''t think that this is really working out. I''m sorry." Fedor looks visibly upset as he replies, "I guess it was never meant to be, I''m sorry for wasting your time.." Fedor then, silently walks you home.'
+					'You shake your head. "Sorry Fedor, but I don''t think that this is really working out. I''m sorry." Fedor looks visibly upset as he replies "I guess it was never meant to be, I''m sorry for wasting your time.." He then silently walks you home.'
 				else
-					'You say to Fedor "You seem like a cool guy but I''m just not ready for a relationship right now." Fedor was visibly upset as he replies, "I guess it wasn''t a good time, if you ever change your mind then pay me a visit at school." he says with a forced smile as he silently walks you home.'
+					'You shake your head. "You seem like a cool guy, but I''m just not ready for a relationship right now." Fedor is visibly upset as he replies "I guess it wasn''t a good time. If you ever change your mind then pay me a visit at school." he says with a forced smile as he silently walks you home.'
 				end
 
 				act 'Leave': gt 'pav_residential'
@@ -1122,7 +937,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Fedor First Date':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><b><h4><font color="blue"><<"Fyodor ">><<"[Fedor]">><<" Kozlov">></font></h4></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/fedor/fedorev/fedorsad.jpg"></center>'
-		'You said to Fedor "I have too much that I need to do right now... maybe some other time." Fedor then lowered his head with a frown. "Okay. Maybe some other time."'
+		'You shake your head. "I have too much that I need to do right now. Maybe some other time." Fedor lowers his head with a frown. "Okay. Maybe some other time."'
 
 		act 'Leave': gt 'pav_residential'
 	end

locations/gschool_chats1.qsrc

@@ -525,7 +525,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina':
 		if AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2:
 		    'You have a pleasant conversation with Albina where you both talk about almost anything, but you are careful not to bring up the Starlets or anything else that might upset her. The conversation ends with Albina embracing you in a tight and extended hug.'
 		elseif grupTipe = 2:
-			'Albina has a somewhat friendly, yet awkward conversation with you. You both talk about your shared interests, but when you bring up family life she fiercely avoids the subject, eventually outright refusing to speak about it.'
+			'Albina has a somewhat friendly, yet awkward conversation with you. You both talk about your shared interests, but when you bring up family life she fiercely avoids the subject, eventually outright refusing to speak with you anymore and storming off.'
 		else
 			'Albina spends a lot of the conversation with her arms crossed and makes no effort to hide her boredom. She doesn''t dislike you, but you think she''s just tolerating your presence and humouring you with conversation.'
 		end
@@ -541,12 +541,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina':
 		end
 	elseif pav_slut >= 200:
 		'Albina just stares at you in disbelief. "There''s some <i>nasty</i> rumors about you going around school. Everyone is saying you''re a cock hungry whore! How can you live like that - just letting guys...use you like that?"'
-		'You are about to speak up, but she shakes her head in disgust and walks away. You can''t tell if she was feeling disgusted or disappointed at you. She might even have been both.'
+		'You are about to speak up, but she shakes her head and walks away. You can''t tell if she was feeling disgusted or disappointed at you. She might even have been both.'
 	else 
 		npc_rel['A23'] += 1
 		'Your conversation, if you can call it that, with Albina is shallow and is over after only a minute or two as she excuses herself.'
 		'"You know my...father...cares...a lot..." She stops herself from laughing before walking away. You''re certain that you hear her holding back tears as she does, but you don''t want to push it and anger her.'
-		'She outright refuses to speak about her home life, her father in particular, and more than a few people have been on the recieving end of her wrath when they press her about the subject.'
+		'She outright refuses to speak about her home life, her father in particular, and more than a few people have been on the receiving end of her wrath when they press her about the subject.'
 	end
 	
 end
@@ -1228,7 +1228,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lariska':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big13.jpg"></center>'
-	if lariskaHelp = -1:
+	if LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = -1:
 		'She looks at you rejectingly and softly says: "Leave me alone <<$pcs_nickname>>. I want nothing to do with you any more."'
 	elseif npc_rel['A13'] >= 50 and pav_slut < 250:
 		npc_rel['A13'] += 1

locations/gschool_grounds.qsrc

@@ -18,7 +18,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/building/gschool.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'Pavlovsk''s only school, all the local children go here for their education. Next to the school is the athletic field, a parking lot for the teachers, just beyond the parking lot is a grove of trees, and past that is the old school building. After the new school was built the old one was supposed to get renovated and used for advance classes but budget cuts meant the project was canceled and now the old school building stands empty. Though many of the kids use it to skip class or as a place to sneak off to drink or have sex.'
+	'Pavlovsk''s only school, where all the local children go for their education. Next to the school is the athletic field and a parking lot for the teachers, with a large grove of trees just beyond them.' 
+	'Past this grove is the old school building, which was supposed to be renovated and used for advance classes after the new one was built, but budget cuts meant the project was cancelled and now the old school building stands empty. Many of the kids use it to skip class or as a place to sneak off to drink or have sex.'
 
 	if ((hour = 6 and minut >= 30) or (hour >= 7 and hour < 18)) and StoryLine > 0 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and kanikuli = 0:
 		'With the school open you can go to the <a href="exec: minut += 1 & gt ''gschool_grounds'', ''change_room''">changing rooms</a> by the gym and change your outfit.'
@@ -26,7 +27,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 
 	if day = nyp_day and month = 12 and StoryLine = 1 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and SchoolBlock = 0:
 		if hour >= 14 and hour < 17:
-			'All the boys and girls are standing near the school. Everyone did their best to look good today, wearing their nicest clothes. Someone calls out to you, "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, are you coming to the New Year''s Eve party or not? You didn''t pay the 1000 <b>₽</b> entry fee yet!"'
+			'All the boys and girls are standing near the school. Everyone did their best to look good today, wearing their nicest clothes. Someone calls out to you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, are you coming to the New Year''s Eve party or not? You didn''t pay the 1000 <b>₽</b> entry fee yet!"'
 
 			if money >= 1000:act 'Go to the party (1,000 <b>₽</b>)':money -= 1000 & gt 'nyp_school', 'start'
 		end
@@ -91,7 +92,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 			'Your Principial begins calling your classmates in alphabetical order. Finally it''s your turn.'
 
 			if pcs_grades >= 90:
-				'You go up to the podium. As the Principal shakes your hand she announces "As every year I''d like to honor our best student of the year. Miss <<$pcs_lastname>> here performed exceptionally well in her studies and I think that deserves some recognition." She starts applaude and the auditorium quickly joins in the applause.'
+				'You go up to the podium. As the Principal shakes your hand she announces "As every year I''d like to honor our best student of the year. Miss <<$pcs_lastname>> here performed exceptionally well in her studies and I think that deserves some recognition." She starts applauding and the auditorium quickly joins in.'
 				if home_owned[2] = 1: 'As you return to your place you see your mother smiling brightly.'
 			elseif pcs_grades >= 70:
 				'You go up to the podium. The Principal shakes your hand and gives you your diploma. "Well done, Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>!" she says before you return to your place.'
@@ -109,8 +110,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 				gs 'underwear', 'remove'
 				gs 'clothing', 'strip'
 				gs 'stat'
-				'After the official graduation, everyone gets hammered at the prom party. You don''t remember much of what happened, only recalling a few flashbacks of going skinny dipping in the town fountain with a group of friends. Your mouth is dry and you can taste beer and what might be a kebab, you are somewhere in the town center, all of your clothes are missing and you are completely naked.'
-				'You make your way back home, you think you are discrete and stick to poorly lit areas but you really don''t remember and somehow have bits of someone''s hedge in your hair.'
+				'After the official graduation, everyone gets hammered at the prom party. You don''t remember much of what happened, only recalling a few flashbacks of going skinny dipping in the town fountain with a group of friends. Your mouth is dry and you can taste beer and what might be a kebab. Looking around, you see that you are somewhere in the town center, all of your clothes are missing and you are completely naked.'
+				'As you make your way back home, you try to be discrete and stick to poorly lit areas, but you really don''t remember and somehow have bits of someone''s hedge in your hair.'
 
 				act 'Go home': gt 'korrPar'
 			end
@@ -173,7 +174,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 				end
 			elseif hour = 8:
 				if NikoEv = 10: gt 'NikoWhore', 'Walk Of Shame'
-				'You missed your whole first class, hopefully no one noticed.'
+				'You missed your whole first class. You hope that no one noticed.'
 				act '<b>Rush to class</b>':	demerit += 10 & gt 'gschool_grounds', 'bulding'
 			elseif hour < 14:
 				'It''s too late for school now. You have been marked as absent today.'
@@ -340,7 +341,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sports':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/fieldwinter.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'There is a football field and around it is a track, often before and after school kids use the field and track.'
+	'There is a football field and around it is a track. Kids often use the field and track before and after school.'
 
 	if week = 5 and hour >= 16 and hour <= 18: 'As you pass by the sports field you hear lots of cheering and yelling coming from the younger kids on the field. As you approach you see '+iif(socialchg['tLazar_day'] ! daystart, '<a href="exec: gt ''gschool_socialchg1'', ''tLazar''">Lazar</a>', 'Lazar')+' is on the football field showing off his skills.'
 
@@ -466,7 +467,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bulding':
 			$text_end = ' And don''t you worry, I will take care of your girlfriend Lariska as well. I''ll teach her what happens when she sides against me.'
 			$npc_notes['A13'] = 'Lariska is an athletic girl with a weak personality: she''s very dependent on other people''s opinions of her. Christina used to control her, but ever since you stood up to Christina she has been a lot more lively. Even though Mikhail Nikolayevich saw a lot of potential in her and offered her a spot on the volleyball team, she''s afraid to go pro. Her close ties with Christina Zvereva have put her in a bad light, and she has now been banned from playing for the volleyball team even if she wanted to.'
 		end
-		'Christina Zvereva approaches you:'
+		'Christina approaches you:'
 		'"What do you want, bitch? Have you recovered from your ass-kicking yet? At least you understand your place now.<<$text_end>>"'
 		lariskaQwestDay += 99999
 	end
@@ -479,7 +480,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'KristinaFight':
 	$location_type = 'event_outdoors'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/christina/school/fight.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'As you cross the school yard after school, you are surprised by a powerful kick in your back. You fall to your hands and knees and rub your sore back for a second, before you turn around and see Christina Zvereva, her face contorted with rage. She yells at you, "You fucking bitch! How dare you spread shit about me like that? I''ll break your fucking face!"'
+	'As you cross the school yard after school, you are surprised by a powerful kick in your back. You fall to your hands and knees and rub your sore back for a second, before you turn around and see Christina, her face contorted with rage, yelling at you. "You fucking bitch! How dare you spread shit about me like that? I''ll break your fucking face!"'
 	act 'Fight her':
 		gs 'fight', 'initFight'
 		gs 'fight_npcdata', 'christina'
@@ -493,7 +494,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SchoolRun':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 30
 	gs 'stat'
-	'You think you might be able to win, and sign up to participate in the competition. After quickly changing into your running gear you return to the track. The guys are having their race first, and you watch them as you prepare. As expected, Ivan Prokhorov wins. When the guys have finished, it is the girls'' turn.'
+	'You think you might be able to win, and sign up to participate in the competition. After quickly changing into your running gear you return to the track. The guys are having their race first, and you watch them as you prepare. As expected, Ivan wins. When the guys have finished, it is the girls'' turn.'
 
 	act 'Go to the start':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -590,11 +591,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SchoolRun2':
 	'You think you might be able to win, and sign up to participate in the competition. After quickly changing into your running gear you return to the track. The guys are having their race first, and you watch them as you prepare. As expected, Ivan Prokhorov wins. When the guys have finished, it is the girls'' turn.'
 
 	if swinbeggor = 0:
-		'Getting ready at the start is Christina Zvereva, one of the girls in your class. She scoffs at you, "You''ll never beat me!"'
+		'Getting ready at the starting line is Christina, one of the girls in your class. She just scoffs at you. "You''ll never beat me!"'
 	elseif swinbeggor = 1:
-		'Getting ready at the start is Christina Zvereva, one of the girls in your class. She looks at you angrily and says, "You beat me once, but never again!"'
+		'Getting ready at the starting line is Christina, one of the girls in your class. She looks at you angrily and says "You beat me once, but never again!"'
 	elseif swinbeggor = 2:
-		'Getting ready at the start is Christina Zvereva, one of the girls in your class. She looks at you with hatred, "You again, bitch? You''re going down this time, I promise you!"'
+		'Getting ready at the starting line is Christina, one of the girls in your class. She looks at you with pure hatred. "You again, bitch? You''re going down this time, I promise you!"'
 	end
 
 	act 'Go to the start':
@@ -678,13 +679,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SchoolRun2_result':
 		else
 			'You have won the competition three more times and Mr. Pavlovich awards you another trophy.'
 		end
-		'Christina Zvereva stands nearby glaring at you the whole time, her hands balled into fists. She''s seething with rage, realizing she cannot beat you.'
+		'Christina stands nearby glaring at you the whole time, her hands balled into fists. She''s seething with rage, realizing she cannot beat you.'
 	elseif swinbeggor = 2 and begresult >= 130:
 		npc_rel['A18'] = 0
-		'Christina Zvereva is gasping for breath at the finish line. She was unable to overtake you, and came second again. Christina avoids your gaze, not wanting to look you in the eye.'
+		'Christina is gasping for breath at the finish line. She was unable to overtake you, and came second again. Christina avoids your gaze, not wanting to look you in the eye.'
 	elseif swinbeggor = 1 and begresult >= 130:
 		npc_rel['A18'] = 0
-		'Christina Zvereva is gasping for breath at the finish line. She was unable to overtake you, and came second yet again. You just flash her a teethy grin and continue your victory lap. Through clenched teeth Christina growls at you, "You bitch!"'
+		'Christina is gasping for breath at the finish line. She was unable to overtake you, and came second yet again. You just flash her a teethy grin and continue your victory lap. Through clenched teeth Christina growls at you. "You bitch!"'
 	end
 
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -736,7 +737,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'change_room':
 	end
 
 	gs 'wardrobe', 'sports_outfit'
-	act 'Change you outfit':
+	act 'Change your outfit':
 		cla
 		gt 'wardrobe', 'start'
 	end

locations/kotovSex.qsrc

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ If $ARGS[0] = '':
 	npc_sex[$boy] += 1
 	if vitekvisit <= 10:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/npc_headshots/big9.jpg"></center>'
-		if KotovZverHelp = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
+		if LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
 			'You give Vitek a light kiss on his lips, and whisper in his ear: "It''s time my hero gets his reward..."'
 		end
 		'Vitek begins to grope you, while he aggressively kisses you on your lips. He grunts: "<<$pcs_nickname>>, take off your clothes."'
@@ -100,7 +100,7 @@ If $ARGS[0] = '':
 		i = rand(1,5)
 		if i <= 2:
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/sequence/kotovpre'+rand(0,4)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
-			if KotovZverHelp = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
+			if LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
 				'You give Vitek a light kiss on his lips, and whisper in his ear: "It''s time my hero gets his reward..."'
 			end
 			'Vitek begins to grope you, while he aggressively kisses you on your lips. You enthusiastically kiss him back, and sit down next to him when he falls back onto his bed.'
@@ -130,7 +130,7 @@ If $ARGS[0] = '':
 			end
 		elseif i = 3:
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/kiss/kotovpre30.mp4"></video></center>'
-			if KotovZverHelp = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
+			if LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
 				'You give Vitek a light kiss on his lips, and whisper in his ear: "It''s time my hero gets his reward..."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 			end
@@ -142,7 +142,7 @@ If $ARGS[0] = '':
 			act 'Spread your legs for him':gt 'kotovSex', 'misionary<<rand (1,4)>>'
 		elseif i = 4:
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/undress/kotovpre50.mp4"></video></center>'
-			if KotovZverHelp = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
+			if LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
 				'You give Vitek a light kiss on his lips, and whisper in his ear: "It''s time my hero gets his reward..."'
 				gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 			end
@@ -152,7 +152,7 @@ If $ARGS[0] = '':
 			act 'Enjoy':gt 'kotovSex', 'kuni'
 		elseif i = 4:
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/undress/kotovpre60.mp4"></video></center>'
-			if KotovZverHelp = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
+			if LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
 				'You give Vitek a light kiss on his lips, and whisper in his ear: "It''s time my hero gets his reward..."'
 			end
 			'You and Vitek kiss a while longer, slowly undressing one another. His hands work his way towards your breasts, and he teasingly pinches your nipples while you rub your fingers over his erect penis. When he puts one hand on your shoulder and pushes you down lightly, you immediately understand what he wants...'
@@ -162,7 +162,7 @@ If $ARGS[0] = '':
 			act 'Kneel down before him':gt 'kotovSex', 'bj'
 		elseif i = 5:
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/undress/kotovpre4'+rand(0,2)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
-			if KotovZverHelp = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
+			if LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = 1 and lariskaQwestDay = daystart:
 				'You give Vitek a light kiss on his lips, and whisper in his ear: "It''s time my hero gets his reward..."'
 			end
 			'When the two of you burst into his room, Vitek immediately pushes you down to your hands and knees and begins to take off your clothes, eagerly running his hands over your ass cheeks.'

locations/saveupdater.qsrc

@@ -892,5 +892,15 @@ if student >= 0:
 	gs 'uniutil', 'transfer_legacy_vars'
 end
 
+!!---------------------------------------------------------------
+
+!! Lariska story variables migrated to array
+if KotovZverHelp > 1    LariskaQW['VitekHelp'] = KotovZverHelp & killvar 'KotovZverHelp'
+if IvanZverHelp > 1     LariskaQW['IvanHelp'] = IvanZverHelp & killvar 'IvanZverHelp'
+if FyodorZverHelp > 1   LariskaQW['FedorHelp'] = FyodorZverHelp & killvar 'FyodorZverHelp'
+if lariskaHelp > 1      LariskaQW['LariskaHelp'] = lariskaHelp & killvar 'lariskaHelp'
+if lariskaHelp_end > 1  LariskaQw['LariskaHelpEnd'] = lariskaHelp_end & killvar 'lariskaHelp_end'
+!!---------------------------------------------------------------
+
 --- saveupdater ---------------------------------