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[text edit] clean up artstudia

Spackled Lanturn 3 years ago
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      locations/artstudia.qsrc

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locations/artstudia.qsrc

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bodimod1':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Patio</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/artsudvor.jpg"></center>'
-	'A small open court yard, which is often used by the art school for outdoor projects. Occasionally some of the students spend time here relaxing or smoking.'
+	'A small open courtyard, which is often used by the art school for outdoor projects. Occasionally, some of the students spend time here relaxing or smoking.'
 	act 'Leave':gt'ugol'
 	
 	if arts = 1:
@@ -23,12 +23,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bodimod2':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>The studio of the artist</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/artscor.jpg"></center>'
-	'The walls of the hallway leading to the art school are decorated in a variety of art, even if the sign out front did not indicate this was the school, this hallway would be a dead give away.'
+	'The walls of the hallway leading to the art school are decorated in a variety of art. Even if the sign out front did not indicate this was the school, this hallway would be a dead give away.'
     act 'Leave':gt'artstudia','bodimod1'
 	
 	if rand(0,2) = 0 and arts_day ! daystart:
-		'There is a number of students gathered here, some of them have removed their clothes and have already been painted by Masya.'
-		'One of the girls calls you over, "Hello again, I''m so glad you came to join us again. Quick, get your clothes off, Masya nearly finished painting Emilia."'
+		'There are a number of students gathered here. Some of them have removed their clothes and have already been painted by Masya.'
+		'One of the girls calls you over, "Hello again, I''m so glad you came to join us again. Quick, get your clothes off. Masya has nearly finished painting Emilia."'
 		act 'Strip off and join in':
 			arts_day = daystart
 			if rand(0,1) = 0:
@@ -46,8 +46,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bodimod3':
     gs'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>The studio of the artist</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/artstudio/downud.jpg"></center>'
-	'After agreeing to join one of the projects, you strip naked and have most of your body painted along with several other students. Once all of you are painted you are sent to one of the busier streets in old town to model the art.'
-	'After several hours and more than a bit of harassment from some of the men, the project is over and you all head back to the studio.'
+	'After agreeing to join one of the projects, you strip naked and have most of your body painted along with several other students. Once all of you are painted, you are sent to one of the busier streets in the Old Town to model the art.'
+	'After several hours and more than a bit of harassment from some of the men, the project is over, and you all head back to the studio.'
 	act 'Leave': gt'artstudia','bodimod2'
 end
 
@@ -57,8 +57,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bodimod4':
     gs'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>The studio of the artist</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/artstudio/downud.jpg"></center>'
-	'After agreeing to join one of the projects, you strip naked and have most of your body painted along with several other students. Once all of you are painted you are sent to one of the busier streets in the city center to model the art.'
-	'After several hours and more than a bit of harassment from some of the men, the project is over and you all head back to the studio.'
+	'After agreeing to join one of the projects, you strip naked and have most of your body painted along with several other students. Once all of you are painted, you are sent to one of the busier streets in the city center to model the art.'
+	'After several hours and more than a bit of harassment from some of the men, the project is over, and you all head back to the studio.'
 	act 'Leave': gt'artstudia','bodimod2'
 end