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Merge remote-tracking branch 'Spackled_Lanturn/minor-fixes'

# Conflicts:
#	locations/VolleyTrenerSpeak.qsrc
#	locations/Voltrener.qsrc
#	locations/VoltrenerSexShower.qsrc
#	locations/Voltrenersex.qsrc
#	locations/webcam_site.qsrc
#	locations/worksalon.qsrc
#	locations/yarik.qsrc
KevinSmarts 3 years ago
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+ 11 - 11
locations/Vnlake1.qsrc

@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 # Vnlake1
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake1.jpg"></center>'
-'While you were sunbathing a tipsy girl holding a bottle of wine walks up to you, she sits down next to you and begins to stroke your back.'
+'While you are sunbathing, a tipsy girl holding a bottle of wine walks up to you. She sits down next to you and begins to stroke your back.'
 	
 gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist'
 if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:	
@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ act 'Kiss':
 	*clr
 	girl += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You turn to her and kiss her lips, she begins to fondle your breasts with her tongue, and her hand massages your pussy.'
+	'You turn to her and kiss her lips. She begins to fondle your breasts with her tongue, and her hand massages your pussy.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'give_kiss', 5, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian'
@@ -31,7 +31,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'variant':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake0.jpg"></center>'
-	'The girl looks at you in anticipation of your actions'
+	'The girl looks at you in anticipation of your actions.'
 
 	act 'Lick her':gt 'Vnlake1', 'ukuni'
 	act 'Ask her to lick you':gt 'Vnlake1', 'kuni'
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ukuni':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake4.jpg"></center>'
-	'You kiss her breasts, eventually moving down lower and lower until your mouth reaches her pussy. You begin to caress her with your tongue, opening the route for your tongue to touch her clitoris, she pushes her lips apart with her fingers to give you full access and you lap away at her clitoris.'
+	'You kiss her breasts, eventually moving down lower and lower until your mouth reaches her pussy. You begin to caress her with your tongue, opening the route for your tongue to touch her clitoris. She pushes her lips apart with her fingers to give you full access, and you lap away.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kuni':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake5.jpg"></center>'
-	'The Girl runs her tongue over your thighs, crotch and delicately kisses your vagina, her tongue slides over your slit then caressing your clitoris it penetrates your vagina.'
+	'The girl runs her tongue over your thighs and crotch and delicately kisses your vagina. Her tongue slides over your slit then, caressing your clitoris, it penetrates your vagina.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anuli':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake6.jpg"></center>'
-	'She kisses your buttocks affectionately, eventually moving to the center. Reaching her goal, she spends your anus with her tongue, then shoves it inside, pulls back to again lick the anus, then repeats several times.'
+	'She kisses your buttocks affectionately, eventually moving to the center. Reaching her goal, she spreads your anus with her tongue, then shoves it inside, pulls back to again lick the anus, then repeats several times.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -87,7 +87,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bvag':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake7.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take the bottle neck and poke it into her pussy, she kisses you while you are driving with one hand and with the other, fondle her breasts.'
+	'You take the bottle neck and poke it into her pussy. She kisses you while you drive it in and out with one hand and, with the other, fondle her breasts.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -114,7 +114,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ubvag':
 	*clr
 	orgasm += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake9.jpg"></center>'
-	'The girl puts the bottle on your pussy, she moves it back and forth while constantly turning it. It feels really good and just keeps getting better, you start to fantasize having sex with a stranger, when your body shudders in orgasm.'
+	'The girl puts the bottle in your pussy. She moves it back and forth while constantly turning it. It feels really good and just keeps getting better. You start to fantasize about having sex with a stranger as your body shudders in orgasm.'
 
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'lesbian'
@@ -127,7 +127,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ubanal':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake10.jpg"></center>'
-	'The girl spits on your ass, collects saliva on the bottle neck and inserts it into your anus, you feel the glass slide into your ass, bringing you pleasure.'
+	'The girl spits on your ass, collects saliva on the bottle neck and inserts it into your anus. You feel the glass slide into your ass, bringing you pleasure.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -140,7 +140,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ubsit':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake11.jpg"></center>'
-	'You put the bottle down and sit on it with your anus, you like the slippery feel of it, she caresses your breasts with her tongue until you get back off the bottle.'
+	'You put the bottle down and sit on it with your anus. You like the slippery feel of it. The girl caresses your breasts with her tongue until you get back off the bottle.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -153,7 +153,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake1/vnlake12.jpg"></center>'
-	'You sit across from each other, your legs interwoven so your pussies touch and started to moving your hips caress each other. You carry on doing this while kissing and touching each other until the wave of pleasure covers you both.'
+	'You sit across from each other, your legs interwoven so your pussies touch, and start to move your hips while caressing each other. You carry on doing this while kissing and touching each other until the wave of pleasure covers you both.'
 
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 	gs 'arousal', 'trib', 10, 'lesbian'

+ 8 - 8
locations/Vnlake2.qsrc

@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 # Vnlake2
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake2/vnlake1.jpg"></center>'
-'Whilst tanning you doze off, and you dream about your breasts being caressed, as someones tongue pleasures your pussy. You open your eyes and understand that this is not a dream, next to you two men one caressing your breasts, the second has already dug his head between your legs.'
+'Whilst tanning, you doze off, and you dream about your breasts being caressed as someone''s tongue pleasures your pussy. You open your eyes and understand that this is not a dream. Next to you, two men one caressing your breasts, the second has already dug his head between your legs.'
 
 gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist'
 if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:		
@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ act 'Touch member':
 	gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 	guy += 2
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake2/vnlake2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You touch one of their members and smile invitingly as you get up on to your knees. The men rise and stand next to you, their members close to you, you take them in your hands hand and begin to suck alternately.'
+	'You touch one of their members and smile invitingly as you get up onto your knees. The men rise and stand next to you, their members close to you. You take them in your hands and begin to suck them, alternating between one and the other.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'group'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -28,7 +28,7 @@ act 'Touch member':
 		cls
 		minut -= 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake2/vnlake3.jpg"></center>'
-		'Having sucked them enough you get on to all fours, one of the men lies in front of you and you take his cock in your mouth, the second kneels behind you and drives himself into your vagina.'
+		'Having sucked them enough, you get on to all fours. One of the men lies in front of you, and you take his cock in your mouth. The second kneels behind you and drives himself into your vagina.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'group'
 		gs 'boyStat', $boy1
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'group'
@@ -39,9 +39,9 @@ act 'Touch member':
 			minut -= 20
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake2/vnlake4.jpg"></center>'
 			gs 'arousal', 'auto_lube', 'anal'
-			'You move forwards and sit on the cock that was in your mouth, hands on your buttocks you present your ass to the other, encouraged he accepts. They fuck you in both holes, while you moan loudly.'
-			'This continues for what feels like forever as you are lost in bliss, finally the member in your ass is removed, you are spent and happy to finish now.'
-			'"Sit your ass here" says the man on the bottom.'
+			'You move forwards and sit on the cock that was in your mouth. Hands on your buttocks, you present your ass to the other. Encouraged, he accepts. They fuck you in both holes, while you moan loudly.'
+			'This continues for what feels like forever as you are lost in bliss. Finally, the member in your ass is removed. You are spent and happy to finish now.'
+			'"Sit your ass here," says the man on the bottom.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 20, 'group'
 			gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal', 20, 'group'
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ act 'Touch member':
 				spafinloc = 4
 				gs 'cum_manage'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake2/vnlake5.jpg"></center>'
-				'You get up, turn around and sit your ass down on the member, the other man stands next to your face and you eagerly take his cock your mouth. Soon you feel that your ass has been flooded with sperm and the dick in your mouth is twitching as the guy struggles to hold back.'
+				'You get up, turn around and sit your ass down on his member. The other man stands next to your face, and you eagerly take his cock in your mouth. Soon, you feel that your ass has been flooded with sperm and the dick in your mouth is twitching as the guy struggles to hold back.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'group'
 				gs 'boyStat', $boy1
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'group'
@@ -66,7 +66,7 @@ act 'Touch member':
 					spafinloc = 11
 					gs 'cum_manage'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/sex/vnlake2/vnlake6.jpg"></center>'
-					'You spit the dick out of your mouth and the man splatters your face with his load.'
+					'You spit the dick out of your mouth, and the man splatters your face with his load.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 

+ 4 - 4
locations/VolkovHome.qsrc

@@ -30,9 +30,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Hallway 2':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/volkovhome/rooms/hallway2.jpg"></center>'
 	if NikoEv = 18:
-		'This is the second floor hallway where the bathroom, Niko''s room and Yurik''s room is located.'
+		'This is the second floor hallway where the bathroom, Niko''s room and Yurik''s room are located.'
 	else
-		'This is the second floor hallway where the <a href="exec:gt ''VolkovHome'', ''Bathroom''">Bathroom</a>, <a href="exec:gt ''VolkovHome'', ''Niko Bedroom''">Niko''s room</a> and <a href="exec:gt ''VolkovHome'', ''Yurik Bedroom''">Yurik''s room</a> is located.'
+		'This is the second floor hallway where the <a href="exec:gt ''VolkovHome'', ''Bathroom''">bathroom</a>, <a href="exec:gt ''VolkovHome'', ''Niko Bedroom''">Niko''s room</a> and <a href="exec:gt ''VolkovHome'', ''Yurik Bedroom''">Yurik''s room</a> are located.'
 	end
 
 	act 'Head downstairs':gt 'NikoEv2', 'Yurik BJ'
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Bathroom':
 	menu_off = 0
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/volkovhome/rooms/bathroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'This bathroom seems rather clean, and has two towels, two bathrobes, a sink, a toilet, a <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>, and a bathtub.'
+	'This bathroom seems rather clean and has two towels, two bathrobes, a sink, a toilet, a <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>, and a bathtub.'
 
 	act 'Quick wash (0:10)':gt 'NikoDates', 'Quick Wash'
 
@@ -77,7 +77,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Quick Wash':
 	gs'stat'
 	'<center><h4><font color="blue">Bathroom</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/fedor/fedorev2/movies/restroom/facecleanse.jpg"></center>'
-	'You grab a few paper towels then approach the sink to clean yourself, as thoroughly, as possible while taking a few seconds to enjoy a splash of warm water on your face, leaving you feeling refreshed as you finish up and walk away from the sink.'
+	'You grab a few paper towels then approach the sink to clean yourself as thoroughly as possible. You take a few seconds to enjoy a splash of warm water on your face, leaving you feeling refreshed as you finish up and walk away from the sink.'
 
 	act 'Dry off':
 		if NikoEv = 5:

+ 29 - 29
locations/VolleyTrenCentr.qsrc

@@ -11,58 +11,58 @@ gs 'stat'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenerspeak18.jpg"></center>'
 if ShowerIvan = 4 and centr = 1:
 	centr = 2
-	'You entered the gym and saw your coach talking to a strange man.'
+	'You enter the gym and see your coach talking to a strange man.'
 	act 'Say hello to Coach':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenerspeak11.jpg"></center>'
-		'After greeting Mikhail, an awkward silence followed, because you didn''t know what to say.'
-		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, what are you doing here?" Mikhail asked you in astonishment.'
-		'"Well, I wanted to improve my physical fitness and since the sports club doesn''t open until 14:00, I figured it was worth the trip into the city to come here," you explained hastily.'
-		'The coach looked at you with an approving nod, "That is good, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
-		'The stranger smiled at you and said, "I am Guang. Your coach and I are old friends from when we used to compete against each other. He represented the people of the Soviet Republics and I, naturally, represented the people of the republic of China. After my team beat his so many times, his government finally convinced me to change sides as it were. Now I train the atheletes of the Russian Federation and Mikhail and I meet here from time to time."'
-		'"I am sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>> and Guang, but my wife is expecting me and I must be going," the coach said, looking at his watch then departed leaving you in the company of the Chinese trainer.'
+		'After greeting Mikhail, an awkward silence follows because you don''t know what to say.'
+		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, what are you doing here?" Mikhail asks you in astonishment.'
+		'"Well, I wanted to improve my physical fitness, and since the sports club doesn''t open until 14:00, I figured it was worth the trip into the city to come here," you explain hastily.'
+		'The coach looks at you with an approving nod, "That is good, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
+		'The stranger smiles at you and says, "I am Guang. Your coach and I are old friends from when we used to compete against each other. He represented the people of the Soviet Republics, and I, naturally, represented the people of the Republic of China. After my team beat his so many times, his government finally convinced me to change sides as it were. Now I train the athletes of the Russian Federation, and Mikhail and I meet here from time to time."'
+		'"I am sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>> and Guang, but my wife is expecting me and I must be going," the coach says, looking at his watch. He then departs, leaving you in the company of the Chinese trainer.'
 		act 'Ask about the coach':
 			cla & *clr
 			
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenerspeak12.jpg"></center>'
-			'As soon as Mikhail left, you bombarded the other trainer with questions about the coach, wanting to know about his life, his girlfriend, about competitions and, of course, about the European championship. Dumbfounded, Guang stared at you, unable to get a word in edgewise for the next few minutes as you jumped from subject to subject without pause.' 
-			'Guang finally managed to force himself into the conversation as you paused momentarily to draw in a breath.'
-			'"If you don''t know these things, it means that Misha didn''t tell you, so why should I tell you and betray my friend''s trust?" he asked you.'
-			'You were at a loss, not knowing how to proceed. Fearing that he was going to continue to scold you, you prepared to leave.'
-			'"Now, if you had some huangjiu, I would happily answer some of your questions," he said dreamily.'
-			'You stared at the Chinese trainer in puzzlement, not understanding what he is asking for.'
-			'"Huangjiu is rice wine from my country," he explained sighing wistfully, "Sadly, it is hard to find outside of great cities like St. Petersburg or Moscow."'
+			'As soon as Mikhail left, you bombard the other trainer with questions about the coach, wanting to know about his life, his girlfriend, competitions and, of course, the European championship. Dumbfounded, Guang stares at you, unable to get a word in edgewise for the next few minutes as you jump from subject to subject without pause.' 
+			'Guang finally manages to force himself into the conversation as you pause momentarily to draw in a breath.'
+			'"If you don''t know these things, it means that Misha didn''t tell you, so why should I tell you and betray my friend''s trust?" he asks you.'
+			'You are at a loss, not knowing how to proceed. Fearing that he is going to continue to scold you, you prepare to leave.'
+			'"Now, if you had some huangjiu, I would happily answer some of your questions," he says dreamily.'
+			'You stare at the Chinese trainer in puzzlement, not understanding what he is asking for.'
+			'"Huangjiu is rice wine from my country," he explains sighing wistfully, "Sadly, it is hard to find outside of great cities like St. Petersburg or Moscow."'
 			'"Okay, so if I bring you a bottle of wungzoo wine you will answer my questions?" you ask eagerly.'
-			'"Huangjiu," he corrected you, "it is called huangjiu. If you find me a bottle, I will answer any question you like."'
-			'"It is a deal," you exclaimed and started to head for the door then turned back to Guang, "Where can I find your rice wine, your Huangjiu?"'
-			'The older man just smiled at you and shrugged.'
+			'"Huangjiu," he corrects you, "it is called huangjiu. If you find me a bottle, I will answer any question you like."'
+			'"It is a deal," you exclaim and start to head for the door then turn back to Guang, "Where can I find your rice wine, your huangjiu?"'
+			'The older man just smiles at you and shrugs.'
 			'You think about it and remember there were a couple of Chinese merchants at the market back home. Maybe one of them will have the rice wine.'
 			ShowerIvan = 5
 			act 'Move away':gt 'fit', 'start'
 		end
 	end
 elseif ShowerIvan = 5 and centr = 2:
-	'You saw Guang and hurried over to him.'
+	'You see Guang and hurry over to him.'
 	act 'Greet Guang':
 		cla & *clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenerspeak13.jpg"></center>'
-		'You went up to Guang and said hello.' 
-		'"Have you brought it?" he asked.'
+		'You go up to Guang and say hello.' 
+		'"Have you brought it?" he asks.'
 		if ricewine = 1:
 			act 'Give him the wine':
 				cla
 				ricewine = 2 & ! to close out the rice wine quest
 				ShowerIvan = 6 &! close Chinese
-				'You show him the bottle of wine and stared questioningly at the other coach.'
-				'Guang sighed, "Okay, I will answer one of your questions, but don''t bug me anymore, and slow down, you talk like a rabid monkey."'
-				'You felt offended for being compared to a rabid monkey, but you restrained yourself.'
+				'You show him the bottle of wine and stare questioningly at the other coach.'
+				'Guang sighs, "Okay, I will answer one of your questions, but don''t bug me anymore, and slow down, you talk like a rabid monkey."'
+				'You feel offended being compared to a rabid monkey, but you restrain yourself.'
 				act 'Ask question':
 					cla & *clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenerspeak15.jpg"></center>'
-					'About the European championship, tell me why the coach doesn''t want to talk about it," you asked after taking a deep breath.' 
-					'Guang bit his lip thoughtfully, then began the story.' 
+					'About the European championship, tell me why the coach doesn''t want to talk about it," you ask after taking a deep breath.' 
+					'Guang bites his lip thoughtfully, then begins the story.' 
 					'"The stories are true, your coach really was on the national team. And they did make it to the European championships."'
-					'With bated breath you listened to the story.'
+					'With bated breath, you listen to the story.'
 					act 'Play on':
 						cla & *clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenerspeak14.jpg"></center>'
@@ -74,8 +74,8 @@ elseif ShowerIvan = 5 and centr = 2:
 							act 'Surprised':
 								cla & *clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenerspeak17.jpg"></center>'
-								'"He almost ended up in jail, but the officials decided to avoid a scandal and just kicked Mikhail off of the team," guang concluded his story.'
-								'"Now I understand why coach shies away from me whenever we start to get close," you thought to yourself.'
+								'"He almost ended up in jail, but the officials decided to avoid a scandal and just kicked Mikhail off of the team," Guang concluded his story.'
+								'"Now I understand why coach shies away from me whenever we start to get close," you think to yourself.'
 								act 'Move away':gt 'fit', 'start'
 							end
 						end
@@ -83,7 +83,7 @@ elseif ShowerIvan = 5 and centr = 2:
 				end
 			end
 		else
-			'"Why are you here then?" he asked as he walked away from you.'
+			'"Why are you here then?" he asks as he walks away from you.'
 			act 'Move away':gt 'fit', 'start'
 		end
 	end

+ 15 - 15
locations/VolleyTrenerSpeak.qsrc

@@ -13,16 +13,16 @@ if volleysostav > 0:
 	   gt 'Voltrenersex', 'discoSex'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/teacher/mikhail/volleytrener2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You go up to Mikhail Nikolaevich, and politely say hello.'
+		'You go up to Mikhail Nikolaevich and politely say hello.'
 		'"<<$pcs_lastname>>, I was told you were here, are you really that stupid? There''s a game tomorrow!"'
-		'"I... err... was... erm... dropping off a book for a friend." you mumble.'
+		'"I...err...was...erm...dropping off a book for a friend," you mumble.'
 		if alko > 1:
 			'"You''ve been drinking! If you can''t even take the team seriously, then you''re not playing tomorrow."'
 			npc_rel['A69'] -= 1
 ! The flag is for no admission to the game on Saturday
 			seealko = 1 
 		end
-		'"Come on I''d better take you home." The coach says. Looks like you are done with the dance for tonight.'
+		'"Come on I''d better take you home," The coach says. Looks like you are done with the dance for tonight.'
 
 		act 'Go with the coach':
 			Discoclose = 1 &!closing disco on this day not to forget stat
@@ -32,36 +32,36 @@ if volleysostav > 0:
 			gs 'stat'
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/gorodok.jpg"></center>'
-			'You walk through town, as you get near your apartment, the coach stops and turns to you to say something.'
+			'You walk through town. As you get near your apartment, the coach stops and turns to you to say something.'
 			act 'Listen to him': gt 'Voltrener', 'trener_speak'
 		end
 	end
 else
 	!---------------------------While not in the squad-------------------------
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/teacher/mikhail/volleytrener1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You go up to Mikhail Nikolaevich, and politely say hello.'
+	'You go up to Mikhail Nikolaevich and politely say hello.'
 	if pcs_vball < 20:
-		'Mikhail turns and looks at you. "Uh... have we met?" He doesn''t seem to recognize you. "Ah, I''ve seen you at school, you''re in pretty good shape, you should come to volleyball training".'
+		'Mikhail turns and looks at you. "Uh... have we met?" He doesn''t seem to recognize you. "Ah, I''ve seen you at school. You''re in pretty good shape, you should come to volleyball training."'
 	elseif pcs_vball < 35:
-		'The coach looked at you with condemnation. "<<$pcs_lastname>>, well done, you''re getting a hang of the basics. You don''t belong here though... although, what do I know?"'
+		'The coach looks at you with condemnation. "<<$pcs_lastname>>, well done. You''re getting a hang of the basics. You don''t belong here though... although, what do I know?"'
 	elseif pcs_vball < 60:
-		'The coach looked at you with condemnation. "<<$pcs_lastname>> you were pretty good in training, but places like this help to regress the formation of skills. You should go home."'
+		'The coach looks at you with condemnation. "<<$pcs_lastname>>, you were pretty good in training, but places like this help to regress the formation of skills. You should go home."'
 	elseif pcs_vball < 80:
-		'The coach looked at you with condemnation. "What are you doing here?"'
+		'The coach looks at you with condemnation. "What are you doing here?"'
 		'"What are you doing here?" You turn the question back onto him.'
-		'"<<$pcs_lastname>>, don''t piss me off, what I do is my business, and what are you doing here is also my business.'
+		'"<<$pcs_lastname>>, don''t piss me off. What I do is my business, and what you are doing here is also my business.'
 		if pcs_horny > 79:
 			trenerlust += 1
-			'"Is that the truth, Mr. Nikolaevich? Are you here because of me?" You move closer to the coach, and flutter your eyes at him.'
+			'"Is that the truth, Mikhail N. Are you here because of me?" You move closer to the coach and flutter your eyes at him.'
 			'"I meant as your coach, and don''t think you can win just by fluttering your eyes. Want to impress me? Workout, and no partying."'
 		else
-			'"As your coach." he adds with a slight blush.'
+			'"As your coach," he adds with a slight blush.'
 		end
 	else
-		'The coach looked at you with condemnation. "<<$pcs_lastname>> you here again, what the fuck? This is not the place for candidates for the team.'
-		'"Mr. Nikolaevich, you never said anything about not going out on a Friday."'
+		'The coach looks at you with condemnation. "<<$pcs_lastname>>, you here again, what the fuck? This is not the place for candidates for the team.'
+		'"Mikhail N. you never said anything about not going out on a Friday."'
 		'"<<$pcs_lastname>>, are you thick? When does the team play?"'
-		'"Saturday." You respond, sheepishly.'
+		'"Saturday," you respond, sheepishly.'
 		'"So, on Friday I expect my players not to hang out here but go home and get some sleep. Or they aren''t going to be fit to play tomorrow. Clear? You have some skill, sort out your attitude and you might yet make the team."'
 	end
 end

+ 28 - 28
locations/VoltrenerSexShower.qsrc

@@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 	act 'Scream':
 		cls
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenersexshower4.jpg"></center>'
-		'You scream with fright and the coach quickly runs out.'
+		'You scream with fright, and the coach quickly runs out.'
 		act 'Finish shower': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 	end
 	gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'self', 'easy'
@@ -44,14 +44,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 			trenerlust += 2
 			cls
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenersexshower6.jpg"></center>'
-			'You smiled at Mikhail Nikolaevich, and continued to wash, making a show of cleaning your bulging ass and breasts, coach watches, but stays perfectly still.'
+			'You smile at Mikhail Nikolaevich and continue to wash, making a show of cleaning your bulging ass and breasts. The coach watches but stays perfectly still.'
 			VoltrenerVoyeur += 1
 			pcs_horny += 10
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Dry yourself off':
 				cls
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenersexshower5.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Stepping out of the shower, you are not at all embarrassed by the coach who continues to stare at you. Drying yourself on a towel you ask, "Get everything you wanted, coach?" The coach smiles, then shakes his head, before leaving slowly.'
+				'Stepping out of the shower, you are not at all embarrassed by the coach who continues to stare at you. Drying yourself with a towel, you ask, "Get everything you wanted, coach?" The coach smiles, then shakes his head, before leaving slowly.'
 				act 'Finish shower': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 			end
 		end
@@ -63,11 +63,11 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 	cls
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenersexshower1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You hear a suspicious noise. Wiping the steam off the glass, you see coach there his cock in his hand, looking at your silhouette...'
+	'You hear a suspicious noise. Wiping the steam off the glass, you see coach there, his cock in his hand, looking at your silhouette...'
 	act 'Flip him off':
 		cls
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenersexshower7.jpg"></center>'
-		'The coach takes the hint and tucking his cock away, does up his trousers and leaves. "It seems he did not have time to cum." You think with a touch of glee."'
+		'The coach takes the hint and, tucking his cock away, does up his trousers and leaves. "It seems he did not have time to cum." You think with a touch of glee."'
 		act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 	end
 	gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'self'
@@ -81,12 +81,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 			gs 'stat'
 			cls
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower8.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop, and falling into a stupor for a few seconds, feeling a fire in your belly you want to do it, but you still hesitate. Watching you frozen with your hand on your pussy, coach says, "Don''t be afraid, you''re a big girl now and it''s normal to have urges. You''ve let me watch you, now you can watch me."'
+			'You stop and fall into a stupor for a few seconds, feeling a fire in your belly. You want to do it, but you still hesitate. Watching you frozen with your hand on your pussy, coach says, "Don''t be afraid, you''re a big girl now and it''s normal to have urges. You''ve let me watch you, now you can watch me."'
 			act 'Watch him':
 				cls
 				pcs_mood = 100
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower9.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You look at his cock as if spellbound... At the same time caressing your Clit, and struggling to suppressing a groan. You see his hand stroking his member, the head appearing, and disappearing. Shaking his balls... The coach groans, and his dick squirts straight at you. Sperm splashes on your body, destroying your resolve, you shake in a powerful orgasm. Through the waves of orgasm you hardly hear what the coach is saying, "That was fun, we should do it again sometime."'
+				'You look at his cock as if spellbound... at the same time caressing your clit and struggling to suppress a groan. You see his hand stroking his member, the head appearing and disappearing. Shaking his balls... the coach groans, and his dick squirts straight at you. Sperm splashes on your body, destroying your resolve, and you shake in a powerful orgasm. Through the waves of orgasm you just barely manage to make out what the coach is saying: "That was fun, we should do it again sometime."'
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 				gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -102,12 +102,12 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 	cls
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower10.jpg"></center>'
-	'Leaning against the glass and sticking out your ass, you moan from the pounding your ass is receiving. What the fuck is that moving the other side of the glass?'
-	act 'To get a better look':
+	'Leaning against the glass and sticking out your ass, you moan from the pounding your ass is receiving. What the fuck is that moving on the other side of the glass?'
+	act 'Get a better look':
 		cls
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower19.jpg"></center>'
-		'You wipe the steam off a patch of the glass in front of you and see coach sitting in the dark, watching as Ivan fucks you in the ass. When he got here and how much he''s seen, you don''t know, but your eyes meet and you are hit by a wave of shame and arousal. You literally throw yourself forward trying to jump off Ivan''s member, but your shaky legs betray you.'
-		'Whether from Ivan''s actions, the fact that the coach is watching you, or the combination of both you begin to cum violently shouting and rhythmically squeezing your classmates cock with your anus. This is more than enough to send Ivan over the edge, his cum filling your ass.'
+		'You wipe the steam off a patch of the glass in front of you and see coach sitting in the dark, watching as Ivan fucks you in the ass. When he got here and how much he''s seen, you don''t know, but your eyes meet, and you are hit by a wave of shame and arousal. You literally throw yourself forward trying to jump off Ivan''s member, but your shaky legs betray you.'
+		'Whether from Ivan''s actions, the fact that the coach is watching you, or the combination of both, you begin to cum violently, shouting and rhythmically squeezing your classmates cock with your anus. This is more than enough to send Ivan over the edge, his cum filling your ass.'
 		pcs_mood = 100
 		$orgasm_txt = 'The sudden feeling of being watched, was new, acute, the orgasm intense. You drop to the floor of the shower and lay there helplessly for some time.'
 		$orgasm_or = 'custom'
@@ -126,9 +126,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 					cls
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower12.jpg"></center>'
-					'Scared, you cover your ass with your hands and look at him like a deer caught in the headlights.'
+					'Scared, you cover you ass with your hands and look at him like a deer caught in the headlights.'
 					'Mikhail Nikolaevich gives you an evil look, "Prokhorov fucks your ass and you scream with joy, but your coach just wants to alleviate some tension and you curl up all scared?"'
-					'You can see from the look in his eyes that he''s been at the wine and his slurring and unsteady legs confirm this. "Your ass isn''t that special." He spits on you and stumbles out of the showers.'
+					'You can see from the look in his eyes that he''s been at the wine, and his slurring and unsteady legs confirm this. "Your ass isn''t that special." He spits on you and stumbles out of the showers.'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Wash your ass':
 						noShampoo = 1
@@ -144,7 +144,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 				trenerlust += 2
 				cls
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower11.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You have no idea what he means but a simple gesture makes it clear what he wants. You willingly grab your but cheeks stretch them apart giving coach full view of your holes. The coach walks up to you his cock in his hand and with just a few quick jerk sprays his seed over your ass his cum mixing with Ivan''s as it dribbles out of your butt.'
+				'You have no idea what he means, but a simple gesture makes it clear what he wants. You willingly grab your butt cheeks and stretch them apart, giving coach full view of your holes. The coach walks up to you his cock in his hand, and with just a few quick jerks, sprays his seed over your ass, his cum mixing with Ivan''s as it dribbles out of your butt.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'flash', 10
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -162,7 +162,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 	cls
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower10.jpg"></center>'
 	'Leaning against the glass and sticking out your ass, you moan from the pounding your ass is receiving. You can see movement through the glass...'
-	act 'To get a better look':
+	act 'Get a better look':
 		cls
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower19.jpg"></center>'
 		'It seems Mikhail, again, decided to admire how your classmate fucks your anus, but Ivan is too busy with your ass to notice anything. You decide to tease the coach a little...'
@@ -171,7 +171,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 		act 'Drop to your knees':
 			cls
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower14.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'You get on my knees and begin to carefully suck Ivan''s member, which has just been in your ass. Surprised, you hear a satisfied snort from both parties, the participant and the viewer. It seems they like what''s happening. You accidentally nudge the door into the shower and it opens, giving the coach an unobstructed view of what you plan to do next.'
+			'You get on your knees and begin to carefully suck Ivan''s member. Surprised, you hear a satisfied snort from both parties, the participant and the viewer. It seems they like what''s happening. You accidentally nudge the door into the shower, and it opens, giving the coach an unobstructed view of what you plan to do next.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'exhibitionism'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Lick his balls':
@@ -184,11 +184,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 					cls
 					facial += 1
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower16.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'It seems Ivan never expected this, but moments later jets of sperm begin fountaining from his member and heavy, warm drops start falling on your face. He clearly liked it very much.'
+					'It seems Ivan never expected this, but moments later, jets of sperm begin fountaining from his member, and heavy, warm drops start falling on your face. He clearly liked it very much.'
 					act 'Turn':
 						cls
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower17.jpg"></center>'
-						'You turn to see the coach still looking, wide-eyed and with his jaw hanging open. Ivan finally notices this, and oblivious to the fact that your actions were only partially for his benifit, hastily covers up, grabs his things and jumps out of the shower. As soon as the door closes behind Ivan, the coach walks closer to you, pulls his member out of his pants and points it at you. Passion and lust overpower you and you immediately reach for his cock, but unfortunately it seems the coach was already on the edge and begins to cum as soon as your hands envelop his shaft. He sprays your breasts with his spunk, then promptly pulls up his pants and leaves you in the shower. On your knees. Overflowing with arousal.'
+						'You turn to see the coach still looking, wide-eyed and with his jaw hanging open. Ivan finally notices this, and oblivious to the fact that your actions were only partially for his benefit, hastily covers up, grabs his things and jumps out of the shower. As soon as the door closes behind Ivan, the coach walks closer to you, pulls his member out of his pants and points it at you. Passion and lust overpower you and you immediately reach for his cock, but unfortunately, it seems the coach was already on the edge, and he begins to cum as soon as your hands envelop his shaft. He sprays your breasts with his spunk, then promptly pulls up his pants and leaves you in the shower. On your knees. Overflowing with arousal.'
 						VoltrenerVoyeur += 1
 						pcs_horny = 100
 						facial += 1
@@ -199,7 +199,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 							cls
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower18.jpg"></center>'
 							$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-							$orgasm_txt = 'You are left almost in tears from the aching, overwhelming feelings of dissatisfaction. Covered in cum and thinking about how both these jerks just left you here in this state, you lie down on the bench beside the shower and furiously start rubbing your pussy, quickly bringing yourself to orgasm. Of course, it was nothing like it could have been, and after ''consoling'' yourself in this way, you promise yourself you will make at least one of them take care of you next time, maybe even both at once. That last thought starts getting your engine running yet again and blushing from such vulgarity, you quickly wash your face and jump out of the shower.'
+							$orgasm_txt = 'You are left almost in tears from the aching, overwhelming feelings of dissatisfaction. Covered in cum and thinking about how both these jerks just left you here in this state, you lie down on the bench beside the shower and furiously start rubbing your pussy, quickly bringing yourself to orgasm. Of course, it was nothing like it could have been, and after ''consoling'' yourself in this way, you promise yourself you will make at least one of them take care of you next time, maybe even both at once. That last thought starts getting your engine running yet again, and blushing from such vulgarity, you quickly wash your face and jump out of the shower.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -220,7 +220,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 	act 'Get a better look':
 		cls
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower19.jpg"></center>'
-		'Through the glass you see Mikhail staring and approaching the booth, while Ivan pays attention to nothing but your ass bouncing with his thrusts. Ivan forgot to close the shower door and you frantically try to correct his mistake, but the constant ass-punding and Ivan''s tight grip on your hips will not let you do it. The door abruptly opens, and you hear the coach growl: "Again? Prokhorov, I''ve had it with you! I will tell your coach and have you banned from the competitions you are preparing for." You immediately feel Ivan''s penis going soft and shrinking inside you, before sliding limply out of your ass. Still terrified, he turns sideways to hide his dignity and pleads "Please don''t do that coach Vlasov! It won''t happen again, and I''ll help with the hall wenever you need me to!", before grabbing his stuff and getting out of the shower.'
+		'Through the glass, you see Mikhail staring and approaching the booth, while Ivan pays attention to nothing but your ass bouncing with his thrusts. Ivan forgot to close the shower door, and you frantically try to correct his mistake, but the constant ass-pounding and Ivan''s tight grip on your hips will not let you do it. The door abruptly opens, and you hear the coach growl: "Again? Prokhorov, I''ve had it with you! I will tell your coach and have you banned from the competitions you are preparing for." You immediately feel Ivan''s penis going soft and shrinking inside you, before sliding limply out of your ass. Still terrified, he turns sideways to hide his dignity and pleads "Please don''t do that coach Nikolaevich! It won''t happen again, and I''ll help with the hall whenever you need me to!" before grabbing his stuff and getting out of the shower.'
 		!!Originally 65, but without significant anal experience Ivan will have you in too much pain to get anywhere near that		
 		if pcs_horny < 30: 
 			act 'Close the shower door':
@@ -237,11 +237,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 				VoltrenerVoyeur += 1
 				ShowerIvan = 3 & ! close sex with the coach in the shower
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenersexshower22.jpg"></center>'
-				'Still unsattisfied by the abrupt end of your sex session with Ivan, you make no effort to close the door or hide your body from the coach. Any fool would understand what you wanted in this situation, and it seems the coach has thought about what you said earlier, so he undresses and climbs into the shower.'
+				'Still unsatisfied by the abrupt end of your sex session with Ivan, you make no effort to close the door or hide your body from the coach. Any fool would understand what you wanted in this situation, and it seems the coach has thought about what you said earlier, so he undresses and climbs into the shower.'
 				act 'On your knees':
 					cls
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower23.jpg"></center>'
-					'You drop to your knees, and take a moment to admire Mikhail''s impressive, rock hard member. As it moves closer, you start to work your tongue, carefully licking first the head of the penis and then the whole thing, with determination burning in your eyes.'
+					'You drop to your knees and take a moment to admire Mikhail''s impressive, rock hard member. As it moves closer, you start to work your tongue, carefully licking first the head of the penis and then the whole thing, with determination burning in your eyes.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Take it in your mouth':
@@ -259,13 +259,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 							finrand = 1
 							if trenerSex = 0:trenerSex = 1 & guy += 1
 							gs 'stat'
-							'After a few minutes the coach pulls his cock out of your mouth, pushes you on your back, raises and spreads your knees, so they''re slightly bent and resting against his chest. In this position your holes are unceremoniously put on display. He pushes a finger into each hole and starts to rub your insides, gradually increasing his pace.'
+							'After a few minutes the coach pulls his cock out of your mouth, pushes you on your back, and raises and spreads your knees so they''re slightly bent and resting against his chest. In this position your holes are unceremoniously put on display. He pushes a finger into each hole and starts to rub your insides, gradually increasing his pace.'
 							if pcs_vag = 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0:
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower26.mp4"></video></center>'
-								'For a moment you feel some regret you might lose your virginity like this, but in your excitement you don''t focus on the thought. But then the coach stops with surprise and says: "Are you a virgin?". It seems he felt one of his finger push against your hymen. Pulling the fingers from your pussy, he switches all his focus to your ass, saying: "No, I will not take your virginity, besides you''ve got more beautiful young holes for me to explore." He continues to finger your anus, which along with his words has you whining with desire. You can''t wait any longer and moan out loud: "Fuck me!"'
+								'For a moment, you feel some regret you might lose your virginity like this, though in your excitement you don''t focus too much on this thought. However, then the coach stops with surprise and says: "Are you a virgin?". It seems he felt one of his finger push against your hymen. Pulling his fingers from your pussy, he switches all his focus to your ass, saying: "No, I will not take your virginity. Besides, you''ve got more beautiful young holes for me to explore." He continues to finger your anus, which along with his words has you whining with desire. You can''t wait any longer and moan out loud: "Fuck me!"'
 							elseif pcs_vag <= 15:
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower26.mp4"></video></center>'
-								'He is having some difficulties fingering your pussy, it seems you''re too tight for him. Pulling the finger from your pussy, he switches all his focus to your ass, saying: "You''re a bit too tight for me, but no matter, you''ve got more beautiful young holes for me to explore." He continues to finger your anus, which along with his words has you whining with desire. You can''t wait any longer and moan out loud: "Fuck me!"'
+								'He is having some difficulties fingering your pussy. It seems you''re too tight for him. Pulling the finger from your pussy, he switches all his focus to your ass, saying: "You''re a bit too tight for me, but no matter, you''ve got more beautiful young holes for me to explore." He continues to finger your anus, which along with his words has you whining with desire. You can''t wait any longer and moan out loud: "Fuck me!"'
 							elseif pcs_vag > 15 and mesec <= 0:
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower25.mp4"></video></center>'
 								'Thrusting one finger in your ass and one in your pussy, the coach begins to move them at the same time in both holes. The feeling of them rubbing against each other through the thin walls between them is driving you wild and forcing you to moan and squirm. A moan almost becomes a scream: "Fuck me, fuck, fuck...", - you cry completely deprived of reason from the overflowing desire.'
@@ -278,7 +278,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower27.jpg"></center>'
 										gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', -15, 'sub'
 										$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-										$orgasm_txt = 'Literally exhausted from your need for a cock inside you, you push the coach on the floor and mount his cock. The head parts your lips, and pushes deep into your pussy, causing wave after wave of pleasure. Starting to move up and down, side to side, you skewer yourself on his cock. Mikhail caresses your neck, then moved down to your chest and showers pleasure on your nipples. He proceeds to squeeze them and in that moment pleasure runs through you like an electric current, causing you to cry out in orgasm.'
+										$orgasm_txt = 'Literally exhausted from your need for a cock inside you, you push the coach on the floor and mount his cock. The head parts your lips, and pushes deep into your pussy, causing wave after wave of pleasure. Starting to move up and down, side to side, you skewer yourself on his cock. Mikhail caresses your neck, then moves down to your chest and showers pleasure on your nipples. He proceeds to squeeze them, and in that moment, pleasure runs through you like an electric current, causing you to cry out in orgasm.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 15, 'sub'
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -292,12 +292,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '5':
 							act 'Offer your ass':
 								cls
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower28.jpg"></center>'
-								'You present your ass to the coach, and soon feel the head of his penis pushing against your anus. You felt a slight pain as it passes through, and try to relax your ass for what''s coming.'
+								'You present your ass to the coach and soon feel the head of his penis pushing against your anus. You feel a slight pain as it passes through and try to relax your ass for what''s coming.'
 								act 'Relax your ass':
 									cls
 									'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenersexshower29.mp4"></video></center>'
 									$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-									$orgasm_txt = 'You feel the head stretch your sphincter, and for a moment you think it might tear. At the same time coaches hands caress your breasts and stroke your pussy, distracting you from the momentary discomfort and quickly turning it to pleasure. He slowly starts thrusting in and out of your hole, his cock pleasantly stretching your walls as it goes. Soon all the discomfort is gone and you begin to thoroughly enjoy his fucking. The cock keeps sliding in and out of your ass, which keeps getting tighter and tighter as you approach your orgasm, before it finally clamps down on him, causing you both to cry out in estasy. A warm liquid fills your bowels, and for a while you hear nothing but heavy breathing fill the shower booth, but then finally the coach heaves a pleasured sigh: "What a sweet ass."'									
+									$orgasm_txt = 'You feel the head stretch your sphincter, and for a moment, you think it might tear. At the same time, coach''s hands caress your breasts and stroke your pussy, distracting you from the momentary discomfort and quickly turning it to pleasure. He slowly starts thrusting in and out of your hole, his cock pleasantly stretching your walls as it goes. Soon all the discomfort is gone and you begin to thoroughly enjoy his fucking. The cock keeps sliding in and out of your ass, which keeps getting tighter and tighter as you approach your orgasm, before it finally clamps down on him, causing you both to cry out in ecstasy. A warm liquid fills your bowels, and for a while, you hear nothing but heavy breathing fill the shower booth. Finally, the coach heaves a pleasured sigh: "What a sweet ass."'									
 									gs 'arousal', 'anal', 15, 'sub'
 									gs 'arousal', 'end'
 									gs 'stat'

+ 86 - 86
locations/Voltrenersex.qsrc

@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You go to the coaches office. Just as you open the door, an arm reaches out and grabs you by the hand and pulls you inside.'
+	'You go to the coach''s office. Just as you open the door, an arm reaches out and grabs you by the hand and pulls you inside.'
 
 	gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 	silavag = 2
@@ -47,26 +47,26 @@ end
 	
 if $ARGS[0] = 'talk':
 	if Voltrenersee = 1:
-		'With a puzzled look on your face you look at your coach, he looks at you then let''s go of your hand and mumbles something, "You have a good technique <<$pcs_lastname>>." With each word his voice becomes more confident, "You need to train more. At some later point, I will show you some more techniques, to improve your game." With an even more puzzled look on your face, you turn around and walk out'
+		'With a puzzled look on your face, you look at your coach. He looks back at you then lets go of your hand and mumbles, "You have a good technique <<$pcs_lastname>>." With each word, his voice becomes more confident. "You need to train more. At some later point, I will show you some more techniques to improve your game." With an even more puzzled look on your face, you turn around and walk out'
 	end
 	if Voltrenersee = 2:
-		'Pulling you in and closing the door the coach whispered angrily: "<<$pcs_lastname>> is this what you''re asking for?" blushing you run out of the coaches office, away from Mikhail Nikolaevich. Although you desire to play on the first team, you''re not ready for something more.'
+		'Pulling you in and closing the door, the coach whispers angrily, "<<$pcs_lastname>> is this what you''re asking for?" Blushing, you run out of the coach''s office, away from Mikhail Nikolaevich. Although you desire to play on the first team, you''re not ready for something more.'
 	end
 	if Voltrenersee => 3:
 		cls
 		pcs_horny += 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex2.jpg"></center>'
-		'Vigorously shaking his head, Mikhail Nikolaevich closes the door. The coach turns to you and doesn''t say a word, grabs you and begins to lift up your shirt. He starts to paw at your <<$titsize>> breasts.'
-		if guy < 3 and pav_slut <= 50: 'You squeaked indignantly and pulled your shirt back down and ran out of the office. Although you can not say that the actions of the coach were so unpleasant. But you are not ready for such things.'	
+		'Vigorously shaking his head, Mikhail Nikolaevich closes the door. The coach turns to you, and without saying a word, grabs you and begins to lift up your shirt. He starts to paw at your <<$titsize>> breasts.'
+		if guy < 3 and pav_slut <= 50: 'You squeak indignantly, pull your shirt back down, and run out of the office. You can not say that the actions of the coach were so unpleasant, but you are not ready for such things.'	
 		if (guy >= 3 and guy < 7) or pav_slut > 50: 'You stand and wait until the coach is done playing with your breasts.'
 		if guy >= 7  or pav_slut > 100:
 			killvar 'volleytanga'
-			'Knowing what the coach wants from you, you pull up your shirt exposing your bare breasts and drawing his strong hands to them. Coach inspired by your actions with obvious pleasure kneads your breasts with his hands. "I go to shower, and here is how boring", - You say you are looking at the challenge of the coach.'
+			'Knowing what the coach wants from you, you pull up your shirt exposing your bare breasts and drawing his strong hands to them. Coach inspired by your actions with obvious pleasure kneads your breasts with his hands. You''re starting to get turned on, but suddenly he stops. "I am going to shower. This is getting boring," he says and heads for the door.'
 			!! volleytanga cleared to end the coach without panties gdksport events
 		else 	
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/teacher/mikhail/volleytrener3.jpg"></center>'
-			'He looks into your eyes, you shiver a bit, whether in anticipation or from excitement, you don''t know, but the coach says "<<$pcs_lastname>> I have business to attend to, we will have to postpone our conversation for now." He pushes you out the door.'	
+			'He looks into your eyes, and you shiver a bit, whether in anticipation or from excitement, you don''t know, but the coach says, "<<$pcs_lastname>>, I have business to attend to. We will have to postpone our conversation for now." He pushes you out the door.'	
 		end
 	end	
 	act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
@@ -80,20 +80,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 	gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex3.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He unzips his fly and pulls down his pants, letting his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock spring to life. Clasping his dick in your hand you start to stroke him, your every movement, causes him to moan in pleasure.'
+	'He unzips his fly and pulls down his pants, letting his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock spring to life. Clasping his dick in your hand, you start to stroke him, your every movement causing him to moan in pleasure.'
 	act 'Balls':
 		cls
 		stat['bj'] += 1
 		eggs += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex4.jpg"></center>'
-		'After jerking him off for a time you lift his cock up and admire his balls, you began to lick and suck his balls as you continue to jerk him off.'
+		'After jerking him off for a time, you lift his cock up and admire his balls. You begin to lick and suck them as you continue to jerk him off.'
 		if pcs_horny < 60:
 			act 'Tease':
 				cls
 				Joke += 1 &! the counter start sex on disco
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voitrensex5.jpg"></center>'
-				'Already preparing to move from the scrotum, you get the idea to tease the coach with out mercy. You let go of him and stand up quickly. Flashing him your boobs and bouncing them around in front of him, then you bolt out the door. Behind you, you hear your coach roar. "<<$pcs_lastname>>, you little tease, I''m going to catch you and pull you into a secluded corner and fuck you right there." Though he sounded angry there was also a hint of laughter to his voice.'
+				'Already preparing to move from the scrotum, you get the idea to tease the coach without mercy. You let go of him and stand up quickly. Flashing him your boobs and bouncing them around in front of him, you then bolt out the door. Behind you, you hear your coach roar, "<<$pcs_lastname>>, you little tease, I''m going to catch you and pull you into a secluded corner and fuck you right there." Though he sounds angry, there is also a hint of laughter to his voice.'
 				act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 			end
 		end
@@ -105,20 +105,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 			gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'self', 'hard'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex6.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'Kissing the head of his cock, you open your mouth and began to caress his dick with your tongue, lightly sucking it. Then, you start to suck his cock in earnest, running your lips up and down his shaft as you bob your head sucking him off, you hands caressing his balls as you do.'
+			'Kissing the head of his cock, you open your mouth and began to caress his dick with your tongue, lightly sucking it. Then, you start to suck his cock in earnest, running your lips up and down his shaft as you bob your head, you hands caressing his balls as you do.'
 			if trenerSex >= 3 and pcs_vag = 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0 and mesec <= 0:
 				if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-					act 'Losing my virginity (<<will_cost>> Willpower)': cla & gt 'Voltrenersex', 'Defl'
+					act 'Lose your virginity (<<will_cost>> Willpower)': cla & gt 'Voltrenersex', 'Defl'
 				else
-					act 'Losing my virginity (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to lose your virginity.</font>'
+					act 'Lose your virginity (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to lose your virginity.</font>'
 				end
 			end
 			
 			act 'Continue to suck':
 				cla
-				'The coach tried to pull his dick from your mouth, but you keeps your lips around his shaft and keep a firm hold of his balls so he can''t pull away from you. You increase you effort, he begins to pant and you can tell he is about to blow his load.'
+				'The coach tries to pull his dick from your mouth, but you keep your lips around his shaft and keep a firm hold of his balls so he can''t pull away from you. You increase your efforts, and he begins to pant. You can tell he is about to blow his load.'
 				if trenerSex >= 10 and pcs_throat > 15:
-					act 'To swallow':
+					act 'Swallow':
 						cls
 						gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 						sexpartkno = 1
@@ -126,7 +126,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 						spafinloc = 12
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex6.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'He begins pumping his dick into your mouth roughly, then with a final grunt you feel the splash of hot sperm splattering inside of your mouth, several more spurts fill your mouth up, you quickly swallow it all.'
+						'He begins pumping his dick into your mouth roughly, then with a final grunt you feel the splash of hot sperm splattering inside of your mouth. Several more spurts fill your mouth up, and you quickly swallow it all.'
 						act 'Masturbate': gt 'Voltrenersex', 'Mast'
 						!if trenerSex => 20 and mesec <= 0: act 'Get lick': dynamic $din_trener_kun
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
@@ -139,7 +139,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 					spafinloc = 14
 					gs 'cum_manage'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex9.jpg"></center>'
-					'Feeling a surge of cock in your mouth, you understand that he is about to blow his load. Pulling the member out of your mouth you keep jerking him off until he starts send spurts of cum showering your breasts.'
+					'Feeling his cock surge in your mouth, you understand that he is about to blow his load. Pulling the member out of your mouth, you keep jerking him off until he starts showering your breasts with spurts of cum.'
 					act 'Masturbate': gt 'Voltrenersex', 'Mast'
 					!if trenerSex => 20 and mesec <= 0: act 'Get lick': dynamic $din_trener_kun
 					act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
@@ -153,7 +153,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 						spafinloc = 12
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex10.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'Your actions had an effect, the coach actively moved his hips thrusting his cock deeper into your mouth. With out warning he begins cumming in your mouth, shooting thick hot spurts of sperm into your mouth, he keeps his dick in your mouth until his spurts his final bit of sperm, then he pulls it out, watching as you swallow his cum.'
+						'Your actions have an effect. The coach actively moves his hips, thrusting his cock deeper. Without warning, he begins cumming, shooting thick hot spurts of sperm into your mouth. He keeps his dick inside until his final bit of sperm dribbles out, then he pulls it out, watching as you swallow his cum.'
 						act 'Masturbate': gt 'Voltrenersex', 'Mast'
 						!if trenerSex => 20 and mesec <= 0: act 'Get lick': dynamic $din_trener_kun
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
@@ -168,7 +168,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 						spafinloc = 12
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex7.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'Feeling a surge of cock in your mouth, you understand that he is about to cum. Pulling the dick out of your mouth, but keep it open with your tongue stuck out. He''s wastes no time jerking himself off and shooting most of his cum in your mouth, some of it splatters on your lips or rains down on your breasts. Waiting until there is no more spurts of sperm you keep your cum coated tongue out. Only then do you close your mouth and swallow his load.'
+						'Feeling his cock surge in your mouth, you understand that he is about to cum. Pulling his dick out of your mouth, you stick out your tongue. He wastes no time jerking himself off, shooting most of his cum into your mouth, though some of it splatters on your lips or rains down on your breasts. You keep your cum coated tongue out until there are no more spurts of sperm. Only then do you close your mouth and swallow his load.'
 						act 'Masturbate': gt 'Voltrenersex', 'Mast'
 						!if trenerSex => 20 and mesec <= 0: act 'Get lick': dynamic $din_trener_kun
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
@@ -188,27 +188,27 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'vag':
 	cls
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex29.jpg"></center>'
-	'Pulling his dick out of your mouth, he lefts you up and lays you back, where he spreads your pussy wide with his fingers. He gently asks "Is this hole ready for some training?", exhausted from the desire you only groaned in response.'
+	'Pulling his dick out of your mouth, he lifts you up and lays you back, then spreads your pussy wide with his fingers. He gently asks, "Is this hole ready for some training?" Consumed with desire, you only groan in response.'
 	act 'Further':
 		cls
 		npc_rel['A69'] += 1
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex30.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'With you still laying on your back he slips two fingers easily into your wet pussy, causing you moan softly. He finger bangs you for some time, leaving you withering in pleasure, he pulls the fingers out of your wet snatch and immediately thrusts them into your mouth. You suck them, tasting your own pussy juices.'
+		'With you still lying on your back, he slips two fingers easily into your wet pussy, causing you to moan softly. He finger bangs you for some time, leaving you writhing in pleasure, then pulls the fingers out of your wet snatch and immediately thrusts them into your mouth. You suck them, tasting your own pussy juices.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Further':
 			cls
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex31.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'After you suck his fingers clean of your pussy juices he grabs you and rolls you over, bending you over. You ask him "Will you wear a rubber?"'
-			'He shakes his head and replies: "No I''m old fashioned and don''t use that rubber shit". A second later his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock slides into you. '
+			'After you suck his fingers clean of your pussy juices, he grabs you and rolls you over, bending you over. You ask him, "Will you wear a rubber?"'
+			'He shakes his head and replies, "No I''m old fashioned and don''t use that rubber shit." A second later, his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock slides into you. '
 			$orgasm_or = 'no'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Further':
 				cls
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex32.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Fucking you doggy style, his fingers begin massaging your asshole. It was nice. Then he slides his thumb in your ass. Feeling yourself filled in two holes was so nice, you reflexively began to compress the vagina clasping tightly around his cock, this immediately affected Mikhail Nikolaevich, he increased the depth and speed of his motion as he fucked you harder.'
+				'Fucking you doggy style, his fingers begin massaging your asshole. It feels nice. Then he slides his thumb into your ass. Feeling yourself filled in two holes is so nice, you reflexively begin to compress your vagina, clasping tightly around his cock. This immediately affects him, and he increases the depth and speed of his motion as he fucks you harder.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal_finger', -5
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -216,7 +216,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vag':
 					cls
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex33.jpg"></center>'
 					$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-					$orgasm_txt = 'Even through the waves of pleasure you are feeling you understand the coach is about to cum and pump your pussy full of his sperm. With a cry you say "Don''t cum in me!", you jump away from him, causing him to pull out of you. You turn around just in time to catch a face full of cum, it spurts and flies all over you face, into your hair and between your breasts.'
+					$orgasm_txt = 'Even through the waves of pleasure you are feeling, you understand the coach is about to cum and pump your pussy full of his sperm. With a cry, you say, "Don''t cum in me!" and jerk away from him, causing him to pull out of you. You turn around just in time to catch a face full of cum. It spurts and flies all over you face, into your hair and between your breasts.'
 					gs 'dinsex','vaginal_sex',10
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -227,7 +227,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vag':
 						spafinloc = 12
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex34.jpg"></center>'
-						'Waiting for the last drops to fall, you begin to use your fingers wipe up his cum, with each glob you raise your fingers to your mouth and suck them clean, only to repeat the process until you have cleaned yourself. After watching this he seems mesmerized by your actions.'
+						'Waiting for the last drops to fall, you begin to use your fingers to wipe up his cum. With each glob, you raise your fingers to your mouth and suck them clean, only to repeat the process until you have cleaned yourself. Watching this, he seems mesmerized by your actions.'
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 					end
 				 end
@@ -239,12 +239,12 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'Anal':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex24.jpg"></center>'
-	'Invitingly you reach back and pull the buns of your ass apart, so your asshole is exposed and gapping slightly from the pressure.'
+	'Invitingly, you reach back and pull the buns of your ass apart so your asshole is exposed and gaping slightly from the pressure.'
 	act 'Further':
 		cls
 		npc_rel['A69'] += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex25.jpg"></center>'
-		'Grinning the coach says "Well since you asked nicely", he starts to lick your asshole, after a time his tongue darts inside of your ass, getting it nice and wet and you very aroused. You being rubbing your pussy at the same time, it is already soaking wet from your excitement.'
+		'Grinning, the coach says, "Well since you asked nicely." He starts to lick your asshole. After a time, his tongue darts inside of your ass, getting it nice and wet and you very aroused. You begin rubbing your pussy at the same time. It is already soaking wet from your excitement.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'rimming', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Further':
@@ -253,14 +253,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Anal':
 			gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 			sexpartkno = 1
 			gs 'dinSex', 'boy_wants_anal', 'lubri'
-			'Once he has your ass good and wet, he sits back and pulls you on top of him. With one hand he guides his cock to your asshole, with the other he pulls you down. You feel the head of his cock against your ass, you bit your lip a little at the pain as he pulls you down forcing his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your ass. Once he has the head in, he uses both hands to hold your hip and pull you down. He encourages you to set the pace, but lifting yourself up and down to fuck his dick with your ass.'
+			'Once he has your ass good and wet, he sits back and pulls you on top of him. With one hand he guides his cock to your asshole, with the other he pulls you down. You feel the head of his cock against you ass. You bite your lip a little at the pain as he pulls you down, forcing his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your ass. Once he has the head in, he uses both hands to hold your hips and pull you down. He encourages you to set the pace, and you lift yourself up and down to fuck his dick with your ass.'
 			gs 'dinsex', 'analsex', 10
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Recover':
 				cls
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex28.jpg"></center>'
-				'He lets you guide the pace and depth for most of the time, but as he begins to pant, he grabs your hips and firmly pulls you down as he thrusts up with his hips. Jamming himself balls deep into your ass. You cry out a little in pain as he stretch out your ass a bit more. After several such thrusts he finally pulls you down, leaving himself buried balls deep in you not moving. You feel his spurts of sperm filling up your ass. Once he has finished he finally lets go of your hips so you can pull yourself up, freeing his cock from your ass. You can already feel the cum running out of your gapped asshole.'
+				'He continues to let you set the pace and depth for most of the time, but as he begins to pant, he grabs your hips and firmly pulls you down as he thrusts up, jamming himself balls deep into your ass. You cry out a little in pain as he stretch out your ass a bit more. After several such thrusts, he finally pulls you down, leaving himself buried balls deep in you not moving. You feel his spurts of sperm filling up your ass. Once he has finished, he finally lets go of your hips so you can pull yourself up. You can already feel the cum running out of your gaped asshole.'
 				act 'Leave': gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 			end
 		end
@@ -270,13 +270,13 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'Defl':
 *clr
 '<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex19.mp4"></video></center>'
-'Sucking the coach you began to caress your pussy, moaning from pleasure.'
+'Sucking the coach, you began to caress your pussy, moaning from pleasure.'
 	act 'Show pussy':
 		*clr & cls
 		gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self', 'hard'
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex20.jpg"></center>'
-		'Mikhail rubs the delicate petals of your pussy, and making sure that you are still a virgin said: "You are still a girl." You watch your coach as he makes the decision on whether or not you will remain a virgin and do you want to stay a virgin?'
+		'Mikhail rubs the delicate petals of your pussy and, making sure that you are still a virgin, says, "You are still a girl." You watch your coach as he decides whether or not you will remain a virgin and realize this is the your last chance to leave before he makes up his mind.'
 		act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 		act 'Stay':
 			cls
@@ -286,26 +286,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Defl':
 			npc_rel['A69'] += 10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex21.jpg"></center>'
-			'Coach dropped to his knees and began to lick your pussy. He then licked the clit, the tongue penetrated into the vagina, when he took the clit into his mouth and began to suck, you thought you were going crazy with pleasure. You grabbed his head with both hands and grinded your crotch against his face.'
+			'Coach drops to his knees and begins to lick your pussy. He then licks the clit, his tongue penetrating your vagina. As he takes your clit into his mouth and begins to suck, you think you are going crazy with pleasure. You grab his head with both hands and grind your crotch against his face.'
 			Act 'Surrender':
 				cls
 				gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex22.jpg"></center>'
-				'He pulled his head away and got up, he slipped his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock inside of you, causing you to cry out when he broke you hymen.'
+				'He pulls his head away and gets up. He slips his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock inside of you, causing you to cry out as he breaks your hymen.'
 				Act 'Further':
 					cls
 					gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 					sexpartkno = 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex23.jpg"></center>'
-					$sexstart2Deflor = '"You''re so sweet", coach caressed your hands, kissed, whispered sweet words to you as he took your virginity. Gradually, you started to get used to the new sensations, feeling of fullness, from having a dick in your body. Mikhail was moving slowly, giving you time to get used to it.'
+					$sexstart2Deflor = '"You''re so sweet." Coach caresses your hands, kissing and whispering sweet words to you as he takes your virginity. Gradually, you start to get used to the new sensation, the feeling of fullness from having a dick in your body. Mikhail moves slowly, giving you time to adjust.'
 					gs 'dinsex','vaginal_sex',10
-					'Then, gradually accelerating, coach, began to gently fuck your pussy. You led, you felt incredible languor, it didn''t really, as during Masturbation, or during anal sex. You seem, what he gets right to the marrow, because there were given a real firework of your emotions from the first vaginal sex.'
+					'Then, gradually accelerating, coach begins to gently fuck your pussy. You feel incredible languor. It''s different from masturbation or anal sex. You feel it in your bones, a real firework of emotions from your first vaginal sex.'
 					gs 'dinsex','sexcum'
 					finrand = 0
 					act 'Recover':
 						cls
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex27.jpg"></center>'
-						'With a grunt you feel his hot sperm shooting into you, filling you up, pulling out of you his cock is covered in blood and sperm, the coach began to talk about something, something about you not be a girl anymore but you really didn''t hear what he said the pain of losing your virginity and the ecstasy of nearly having your first orgasm distracted you. You finally notice your coach giving you an attentive and caring look, as he helps you gather up your stuff. Once you are redressed you leave his office, ready to see the world in a new way.'
+						'With a grunt, you feel his hot sperm shooting into you, filling you up. Pulling out of you, his cock is covered in blood and sperm. The coach began to talk about something... something about you not be a girl anymore, but you really don''t hear what he says. The pain of losing your virginity and the ecstasy of nearly having your first orgasm distract you. You finally notice your coach giving you an attentive and caring look as he helps you gather up your stuff. Once you are redressed, you leave his office, ready to see the world in a new way.'
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 					end
 				end
@@ -319,27 +319,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Mast':
 gs 'arousal','masturbate', 10
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex11.jpg"></center>'
-'Looking your coach in the eyes, you remove the rest of your clothes and start to lick and suck on your own fingers. The coach seems to understood your idea and sits down ready to watch the show.'
+'Looking your coach in the eyes, you remove the rest of your clothes and start to lick and suck on your fingers. The coach seems to understand your idea and sits down ready to watch the show.'
 	act 'Expose your pussy':
 		cls
 		if pcs_inhib < 40:inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex12.jpg"></center>'
-		'Sitting you spread legs as wide as they will go, showing coach your pussy oozing with juices.'
-		act 'Fondle nipples':
+		'Sitting, you spread your legs as wide as they will go, showing coach your pussy oozing with juices.'
+		act 'Fondle your nipples':
 			pcs_horny += 10
 			cls
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex13.jpg"></center>'
-			'Getting more aroused at the idea of your coach watching you, you begin to caress her breasts, twisting the nipples gently with your fingers.'
-			act 'Caress the clitoris':
+			'Getting more aroused at the idea of your coach watching you, you begin to caress your breasts, twisting the nipples gently with your fingers.'
+			act 'Caress your clitoris':
 				pcs_horny += 10
 				cls
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex14.jpg"></center>'
-				'It is obvious you coach is enjoying the show, the bulge in his pants making no secret of it. You lowered one hand to her wet crotch while the other continued to play with a nipple, when you hand touched her clit it seemed as if an electric discharge passed through your body, you moan in passion and begin to frantically rub your clit.'
-				act 'To caress the anus':
+				'It is obvious your coach is enjoying the show. The bulge in his pants making no secret of it. You lower one hand to your wet crotch while the other continues to play with a nipple. When your hand touches your clit it seems as if an electric discharge passes through your body. You moan in passion and begin to frantically rub your clit.'
+				act 'Caress your anus':
 					cls
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex15.jpg"></center>'
 					'Incessantly rubbing your clit, your second hand began to massage your asshole.'
-					act 'Come':
+					act 'Cum':
 						pcs_horny = 0
 						orgasm += 1
 						pcs_mood += 20
@@ -347,7 +347,7 @@ gs 'stat'
 						gs 'stat'
 						cls
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex16.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'Unable to withstand this double pressure, your body convulses as you have an orgasm. Once the feeling passes you look up at your coach as he says "Yes <<$pcs_lastname>>, you look so hot"'
+						'Unable to withstand this double pressure, your body convulses as you have an orgasm. Once the feeling passes, you look up at your coach as he says, "Yes <<$pcs_lastname>>, you look so hot."'
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 					end
 					i = rand(1,4)
@@ -355,8 +355,8 @@ gs 'stat'
 						act 'Look at the coach':
 							cls
 							'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex17.mp4"></video></center>'
-							'You through the mental fog of your orgasm looking at coach, he''s has his dick in his hand as he approaches you and starts rubbing the head of it against you soaking wet pussy.'
-							act 'Pulling a member':
+							'Through the mental fog of your orgasm, you look at coach. He has his dick in his hand as he approaches you and starts rubbing the head of it against your soaking wet pussy.'
+							act 'Pull his member inside':
 								cls
 								minut += 10
 								pcs_horny = 0
@@ -365,7 +365,7 @@ gs 'stat'
 								gs 'arousal','end'
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensex18.mp4"></video></center>'
-								'Maddened with desire you grab Mikhail Nikolaevich cock and try to pull it inside of you, as you stroke him. But it looks like you won''t get a chance as he immediately starts to cum. Drops of semen begin raining down on your tummy.'
+								'Maddened with desire you grab Mikhail Nikolaevich''s cock and try to pull it inside of you. But it looks like you won''t get a chance as he immediately starts to cum. Drops of semen begin raining down on your tummy.'
 								act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 							end
 						end
@@ -387,19 +387,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mikhail/sex/tren.jpg"></center>'
-		'You squat in front of the coach and stroke his crotch feeling his cock stand up. You reach into his sweatpants and caress his balls, while the other hand grabs his throbbing hard cock. You pull it free from his sweatpants and lean toward him, wrapping your lips around the head, before giving him a blowjob he''ll never forget.'
+		'You squat in front of the coach and stroke his crotch, feeling his cock stand up. You reach into his sweatpants, caressing his balls with one hand while the other grabs his throbbing hard cock. You pull it free from his sweatpants and lean toward him, wrapping your lips around the head, before giving him a blowjob he''ll never forget.'
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 		sexpartkno = 1
 		spafinloc = 12
 		gs 'cum_manage'
 		swallow += 1
 		gs 'stat'
-		'Coach groans as fills your mouth with warm sperm. You swallow it all down, then open your mouth sticking out your tongue, to show that you had swallowed every drop.'
+		'Coach groans as he fills your mouth with warm sperm. You swallow it all down then open your mouth, sticking out your tongue to show that you had swallowed every drop.'
 
 		if volleysostav = 0:
 			volleysostav = 1
 			if npc_rel['A69'] < 20:npc_rel['A69'] = 20
-			'Coach puts his cock back in his pants. "Okay <<$pcs_lastname>>, you are very diligent girl, I can see you fitting in very well, consider yourself on the team, as a sub of course."'
+			'Coach puts his cock back in his pants. "Okay <<$pcs_lastname>>, you are very diligent girl. I can see you fitting in very well. Consider yourself on the team, as a sub of course."'
 		end
 
 		act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
@@ -407,32 +407,32 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'masaj':
-	'"<<$pcs_lastname>>, you look tired, do you want a massage?"'
+	'"<<$pcs_lastname>>, you look tired. Do you want a massage?"'
 	act 'Agree':
 		cls
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenermasaj1.jpg"></center>'	
-		'Coach lubricates his hand with oil and said to you: "Undress", you are slightly embarrassed, but also hot with desire to get a massage and you began to pull your clothes off.'
+		'Coach lubricates his hand with oil and says, "Undress." You are slightly embarrassed, but also hot with desire to get a massage, and you begin to pull your clothes off.'
 		act 'Undress':
 			cls
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenermasaj2.jpg"></center>'	
-			'"Fully undressed", added coach, when he seen that you hesitated on panties. Sighing, you pull your panties off.'
+			'"Fully undressed," adds coach when he sees you hesitate when you reach your panties. Sighing, you pull them off.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Lie down':
 				cls
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenermasaj3.jpg"></center>'	
-				'You sat on the edge of the sofa covered in sheets, it seems the coach is going to use it as a massage table. The coach looks at you and says "Lie down on your back and relax."'
+				'You sit on the edge of the sofa covered in sheets. It seems the coach is going to use it as a massage table. The coach looks at you and says, "Lie down on your back and relax."'
 				act 'Relax':
 					cls
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenermasaj4.jpg"></center>'
-					'You lay on the sofa, as the coach began to lubricate your naked body with oil, gently rubbing your chest, foot, neck, rubbing the oil in and relaxing the muscles. You nipples harden from the feelings of pleasure and you blush. Seeing this, the coach just smiled.'	
+					'You lie on the sofa as the coach begins to lubricate your naked body with oil, gently rubbing it on your chest, foot, and neck and relaxing the muscles. Your nipples harden from the feeling of pleasure, and you blush. Seeing this, the coach just smiles.'	
 					gs 'arousal', 'massage', 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Further':
 						cls
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenermasaj5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Mikhail began to knead your feet, lifting and twisting them. And you could only moan with pleasure and mild pain. You lost all track of time as the coach massaged you.'
+						'Mikhail begins to knead your feet, lifting and twisting them, and you can only moan with pleasure and mild pain. You lose all track of time as the coach massages you.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'massage', 10
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Further':
@@ -442,37 +442,37 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'masaj':
 							gs 'stat'
 							cls
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenermasaj6.jpg"></center>'
-							'You lie with your legs spread apart, you can feel how wet your pussy is. Perfectly visible to your coach, he gently glides his hands over your body. Then Mikhail Nikolayevich asked "Well that ''s all for today, or do you want to continue?".'
+							'You lie with your legs spread apart. You can feel how wet your pussy is. Perfectly visible to your coach, he gently glides his hands over your body. Then Mikhail Nikolayevich asks, "Should that be all for today, or do you want to continue?".'
 							act 'Dress and leave': gs 'arousal', 'end' & gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 							if pcs_horny >= 100 and rand(0,1) = 1 and mesec <= 0: 
 								act 'Continue':
 									cls
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/event/voltrenermasaj7.jpg"></center>'
-									'He slide his hand between your legs, the touch was so light, intoxicating and gentle. You desire building in your body, all you want to do is just grab him and force his hand to caress you firmer. Mikhail continued stroking your hot swollen pussy, from which flowed your wetness. Closing your eyes, you try not to moan, suddenly you feel the touch of the lips and tongue on your pussy.'
+									'He slides his hand between your legs, the touch so light, intoxicating and gentle. Your desire builds in your body. All you want to do is just grab him and force his hand to caress you firmer. Mikhail continues stroking your hot swollen pussy from which your wetness flows. Closing your eyes, you try not to moan. Suddenly, you feel the touch of his lips and tongue on your pussy.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 									gs 'stat'
 									act 'Further':
 										cls
 										npc_rel['A69'] += 1
 										'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenermasaj8.mp4"></video></center>'
-										$orgasm_txt = 'His mouth and tongue worked your pussy, bringing you to new highest of passion and pleasure. Before long your body is wracked with rolling orgasms.'
+										$orgasm_txt = 'His mouth and tongue work your pussy, bringing you to new heights of passion and pleasure. Before long, your body is wracked with rolling orgasms.'
 										$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 										gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5
 										gs 'stat'
 										act 'Recover':
 											cls
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenermasaj9.jpg"></center>'
-											'With your eyes still closed you recover form your orgasm. Mikhail, moved up near you head, he starts to massage your breasts next.'
+											'With your eyes still closed, you recover from your orgasm. Mikhail, moves up near you head and starts to massage your breasts next.'
 											gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 											gs 'stat'
 											act 'Lick':
 												cls
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenermasaj10.jpg"></center>'
-												'As he massages your breasts with his hands, you feel something hard start bumping into your face and lips. Opening your eyes you see his hard dick practically lying on your face. Then you hear him say "Open your mouth."'
-												act 'Open mouth':
+												'As he massages your breasts with his hands, you feel something hard start bumping into your face and lips. Opening your eyes, you see his hard dick practically lying on your face. Then you hear him say, "Open your mouth."'
+												act 'Open your mouth':
 													cls
 													'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenermasaj11.jpg"></center>'
-													'You happily open your mouth, he grabs you and pulls you towards him till your head is off the couch and your head tilts back, till holding your mouth open, he slides his dick in your mouth. You instantly start sucking his cock. At first he is slow and gentle as he thrust into your mouth, but as he gets more aroused he gets faster and harder. He starts driving his cock into your mouth and down your throat as he literally starts to fuck your mouth. Despite the discomfort of feeling his cock thrust down your throat you still moan in pleasure.'
+													'You happily open your mouth. He grabs you and pulls you towards him till your head is off the couch tilting back, then slides his dick into your mouth. You instantly start sucking his cock. At first, he is slow and gentle as he thrusts into your mouth, but as he gets more aroused, he gets faster and harder. He drives his cock into your mouth and down your throat as he literally starts to fuck your mouth. Despite some discomfort, you still moan in pleasure.'
 													gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'deepthroat'
 													gs 'stat'
 													act 'Swallow':
@@ -484,11 +484,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'masaj':
 														trenerSex += 1
 														gs 'stat'
 														'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenermasaj12.mp4"></video></center>'
-														'Expecting him to cum when he had his cock pushed deep in your throat, he surprises you and pulls out instead. Leaving his dick on your face, the head of his cock over your mouth he finally cums, shooting large spurts of sperm into your mouth, a few spurts end up on your chin. Still it feels like he nearly completely fills your mouth with his cum, you barely manage to swallow it all.'
+														'Expecting him to cum when he had his cock pushed deep in your throat, he surprises you and pulls out instead. Leaving his dick on your face, the head of his cock over your mouth, he finally cums, shooting large spurts of sperm into your mouth. A few spurts end up on your chin, but it still feels like he nearly completely fills your mouth with his cum, and you barely manage to swallow it all.'
 														act 'Further':
 															cls
 															'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voltrenermasaj13.jpg"></center>'
-															'Coach exhausted on shaky legs moved away and sat down. You look at him and use your fingers to push the cum from your chin into your mouth where you swallow that down too.'
+															'Coach, exhausted on shaky legs, moves away and sits down. You look at him and use your fingers to push the cum from your chin into your mouth where you swallow that down too.'
 															act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
 														end
 													end
@@ -509,48 +509,48 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'discoSex':
 	cls
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/teacher/mikhail/volleytrener4.jpg"></center>'
-	'"<<$pcs_lastname>>, let''s find a secluded place to fuck." You are about to say that there isn''t a quiet place, when coach smiles and says, "Follow me."'
+	'"<<$pcs_lastname>>, let''s find a secluded place to fuck." You are about to say that there isn''t a quiet place when coach smiles and says, "Follow me."'
 	act 'Follow him':
 		if rand (0,2) = 0:
 			cls
 			if pcs_horny > 80:
 				volume = 40
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensexdisco1.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'He takes you down the hall to one of the girls bathrooms, he pulls the door open as you get to it. Letting you walk in first, he follows closely behind.'
-				act 'Pulling up your skirt':
+				'He takes you down the hall to one of the girls bathrooms and pulls the door open as you get to it. Letting you walk in first, he follows close behind.'
+				act 'Pull up your skirt':
 					cls
 					npc_rel['A69'] += 5
 					if $pantyworntype ! 'none':
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensexdisco2.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'You sit on one of the toilets, pulling your skirt up and spreading your legs, watching your little display for a moment. He pulls you up and then pulls your panties down, letting them pool around your ankles.'
+						'You sit on one of the toilets, pulling your skirt up and spreading your legs. Watching your little display for a moment, he pulls you up and then pulls you panties down, letting them pool around your ankles.'
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensexdisco3.jpg"></center>'
-						'Stepping out of your panties around your ankles you pull up your skirt showing him your naked wet pussy. While the coach pulls out his hard dick and starts stroking it as he watched you.'
+						'Stepping out of your panties, you pull up your skirt, showing him your naked wet pussy. The coach pulls out his hard dick and starts stroking it as he watches you.'
 					end
 					gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2
 					gs 'stat'
-					act 'Bending over to show him your ass':
+					act 'Bend over to show him your ass':
 						cls
 						gs 'boyStat', 'A69'
 						gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensexdisco4.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'As you bend over you pull up your skirt showing him your bare ass. Almost at once he grabs your hip with one hand, apparently no longer wanting to just watch. With his other hand he guides his dick, he rubs the head of it against your wet pussy. Then trails it up to your asshole, leaving a trail of your wetness from your pussy to your ass, then he slides it back down and rubs his head against your pussy again.'
-						'Getting the head of his dick even more soaked in your pussy juices, once more he slides it back up and starts rubbing it against your asshole. This time he doesn''t slide it back down, instead he pushes the head of his dick into your ass. You wince and cry out slightly in pain, as you feel the head of his dick force itself into your ass. He rubs your back with one hand, caressing you. "Take a breath and relax it will feel better."'
-						act 'Fuck your ass':
+						'As you bend over, you pull up your skirt showing him your bare ass. Almost at once, he grabs your hip with one hand, apparently no longer wanting to just watch. With his other hand, he guides his dick, rubbing the head of it against your wet pussy then sliding it up to your asshole, leaving a trail of your wetness. He then slides it back down and rubs his head against your pussy again.'
+						'Having gotten the head of his dick even more soaked in your pussy juices, once more he slides it back up and starts rubbing it against your asshole. This time he doesn''t slide it back down. Instead, he pushes the head of his dick into your ass. You wince and cry out slightly in pain as you feel the head of his dick force itself inside. He rubs your back with one hand, caressing you. "Take a breath and relax. It will feel better."'
+						act 'Get your ass fucked':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensexdisco5.mp4"></video></center>'
 							gs 'dinSex','boy_wants_anal','lubri'
 							gs 'arousal', 'auto_lube', 'anal'
-							'You do your best to do as he says, taking a deep breath and trying to relax, but it is hard to relax when you have a <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in your ass. He begins slowly and gently fucking your ass, with each stroke he does just a tiny bit deeper. Bitting your lower lip in pain as he slowly fucks your ass.'
-							'But he was right in time it hurts less and even starts to feel kinda good, a bit of a mixture of pleasure and pain. You feel yourself starting to moan. Taking this as a sign you are ready he starts to pump in and out of your ass faster, slowly but steadily picking up the pace, until he is pounding your balls deep in your ass.'
-							'You moan in a groan as he fucks your ass, you can''t decided which sensation is stronger, the pain or the pleasure.'
+							'You do your best to do as he says, taking a deep breath and trying to relax, but it is hard to relax when you have a <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in your ass. You bite your lower lip in pain as he begins slowly and gently fucking your ass, with each stroke just a tiny bit deeper.'
+							'But he was right. In time, it hurts less and even starts to feel kinda good, a bit of a mixture of pleasure and pain. You feel yourself starting to moan. Taking this as a sign you are ready, he starts to pump in and out of your ass faster, slowly but steadily picking up the pace until he is pounding you balls deep.'
+							'You moan in a groan as he fucks your ass. You can''t decide which sensation is stronger, the pain or the pleasure.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10
 							gs 'stat'
 							act 'Cumming':
 								cls
 								'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/community/gym/volley/sex/voitrensexdisco6.mp4"></video></center>'
-								'He suddenly pulls out of your ass, at once you feel the streams of hot sperm landing on your ass, several spurts of cum cover your ass, with a sigh of satisfaction he puts his dick away as he waits, leaving your to clean the cum off your ass.'
+								'He suddenly pulls out, and at once you feel streams of hot sperm landing on your ass. With a sigh of satisfaction, he puts his dick away as he waits, leaving you to clean the cum off.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'cum_call', 'butt', $boy, 1
@@ -564,7 +564,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'discoSex':
 									close all
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/gorodok.jpg"></center>'
-									'Leaving you walk through town, as you get near your apartment, the coach stops and turns to you to say something.'
+									'Leaving, you walk through town. As you get near your apartment, the coach stops and turns to you to say something.'
 									act 'Listen to him': gt 'Voltrener', 'trener_speak'
 								end
 							end
@@ -573,7 +573,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'discoSex':
 				end
 			else
 			  '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/vladimir/sex/fatherim34.jpg"></center>'
-				'Having brought you to the girls bathroom, you stop and say to him, "Not the most secluded place Mikhail," turning away, you walk off. He sighs but smiles, as he watches your tight little ass as you walk away. "Ok we can go home if this isn''t good enough."'
+				'Having been brought to the girls bathroom, you stop and say to him, "Not the most secluded place Mikhail." Turning away, you walk off. He sighs but smiles as he watches your tight little ass as you walk away. "Ok, we can go home if this isn''t good enough."'
 				act 'Go with coach':
 					Discoclose = 1
 					minut += 20
@@ -582,7 +582,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'discoSex':
 					gs 'stat'
 					cls
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/gorodok.jpg"></center>'
-					'You walk through town, as you get near your apartment, the coach stops and turns to you to say something.'
+					'You walk through town. As you get near your apartment, the coach stops and turns to you to say something.'
 					act 'Listen to him': gt 'Voltrener', 'trener_speak'
 				end
 			end
@@ -594,9 +594,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'discoSex':
 			gs 'stat'
 			cls
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/gorodok.jpg"></center>'
-			'Having brought you to the toilet, the coach opened the door and sees it is full of students. "Now that is a pity."'
-			'He looks genuinely upset and dejectedly, he offers to walk you home. You don''t think he''ll let you say no, so you agree.'
-			'You walk through town, as you get near your apartment, the coach stops and turns to you to say something.'
+			'Having brought you to the toilet, the coach opens the door and sees it is full of students. "Now that is a pity."'
+			'He looks genuinely upset and dejectedly offers to walk you home. You don''t think he''ll let you say no, so you agree.'
+			'You walk through town. As you get near your apartment, the coach stops and turns to you to say something.'
 			act 'Listen to him': gt 'Voltrener', 'trener_speak'
 		end
 	end

+ 12 - 12
locations/WorkHosp.qsrc

@@ -14,26 +14,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'The hospital staff are hard at work, with many patients waiting in the lobbies. Doctors and nurses rush from office to office trying to keep the flow of patients going as quickly as possible.'
 	jobhosprand = rand(0, 9)
 
-	act 'Work in the Operating Room (1:00)':
+	act 'Work in the operating room (1:00)':
 		cla
 		minut += 60
 		medcn_exp += rand (0,2) 
 
 		if jobhosprand = 0:gt 'WorkHosp', '2'
 
-		'You were part of the operating team, helping the doctors with whatever tasks they requested of you.'
+		'You work as part of the operating team, helping the doctors with whatever tasks they request of you.'
 
 		act 'Move away':gt 'WorkHosp', 'start'
 	end
 
-	act 'Help the doctor at the Emergency Room (1:00)':
+	act 'Help the doctors in the emergency room (1:00)':
 		cla
 		minut += 60
 		medcn_exp += rand (0,2)
 
 		if jobhosprand = 0:gt 'WorkHosp', '3'
 
-		'You spent a frenzied hour helping patients that came into the Emergency room.'
+		'You spend a frenzied hour helping patients that come into the emergency room.'
 
 		act 'Move away':gt 'WorkHosp', 'start'
 	end
@@ -79,7 +79,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 		if npc_rel['A219'] > 60 and military = 0:gt 'WorkHosp', 'milit'
 
-		'You spent some time chatting with Kat.'
+		'You spend some time chatting with Kat.'
 
 
 		if npc_rel['A219'] > 50:
@@ -102,7 +102,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'milit':
 	cla
 	military = 1
-	'"Listen, I am scheduled to work this weekend, but I have plans. Here''s the deal, War games are often held not far from the city and well, according to the rules, they need doctors on site before they can begin. Don''t worry, you will have a doctor with you, so the most you''ll need to do is apply some bandages. If you feel up to it, on Saturday you can catch a bus at the clinic between 6 and 9. Oh yeah, I almost forgot! The pay for two days is 5000 <b>₽</b>. So what do you say?" asks Kat.'
+	'"Listen, I am scheduled to work this weekend, but I have plans. Here''s the deal: war games are often held not far from the city and, well, according to the rules, they need doctors on site before they can begin. Don''t worry, you will have a doctor with you, so the most you''ll need to do is apply some bandages. If you feel up to it, on Saturday you can catch a bus at the clinic between 6 and 9. Oh yeah, I almost forgot! The pay for two days is 5000 <b>₽</b>. So what do you say?" asks Kat.'
 
 	act 'Move away':gt 'WorkHosp', 'start'
 end
@@ -118,7 +118,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '0':
 		xgt 'lezbsex', 'var'
 	elseif katprorand = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/clinic/sex/hospsex7.jpg"></center>'
-		'You and Kat just began to fondle each other when a patient entered the room. You backed away from her trying to pretend that nothing was happening. On the contrary, Kat did not hesitate and was lying on the couch with her legs spread wide, proudly showing off her wet pussy. She guides you back down to her pussy, leaving no doubt what she expects your tongue to be doing, while looking hungrily at the guy and inviting him to join in the fun.'
+		'You and Kat have just begun to fondle each other when a patient enters the room. You back away from her, trying to pretend that nothing was happening. In contrast, Kat does not hesitate and lies down on the couch with her legs spread wide, proudly showing off her wet pussy. She guides you back down to her pussy, leaving no doubt what she expects your tongue to be doing, while looking hungrily at the guy and inviting him to join in the fun.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave':gt 'WorkHosp', 'start'
@@ -139,7 +139,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '0':
 		end
 	elseif katprorand = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/clinic/sex/hospsex8.jpg"></center>'
-		'While Kat and you are in full swing, two doctors enter the room. You are both engrossed with each other, that you didn''t even notice them until they started to caress you. You both spread your legs wider, inviting them to join the fun.'
+		'While Kat and you are in full swing, two doctors enter the room. You are both so engrossed with each other that you don''t even notice them until they started to caress you. You both spread your legs wider, inviting them to join the fun.'
 
 		act 'Entertain them':
 			gang += 1
@@ -169,7 +169,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 
 	if mastrrand = 0:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/clinic/sex/hospsex9.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you masturbate, you totally abandon yourself to the pleasure of your coming orgasm. A doctor enters the room but you are so absorbed in your own pleasure that you only notice him when his hand starts to guide your head to his erect cock.'
+		'As you masturbate, you totally abandon yourself to the pleasure of your coming orgasm. A doctor enters the room, but you are so absorbed in your own pleasure that you only notice him when his hand starts to guide your head to his erect cock.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		
@@ -195,7 +195,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 	else
 		picrand = rand(12, 13)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/clinic/sex/hospsex10.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you lose yourself in pleasure, two doctors come into the room. You are so distracted, that you only notice them when they start to openly masturbate in front of you.'
+		'As you lose yourself in pleasure, two doctors come into the room. You are so distracted that you only notice them when they start to openly masturbate in front of you.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 10
 		gs 'stat'
 					
@@ -234,7 +234,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 	*clr & cla
 	picrand = rand(13, 15)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/clinic/sex/hospsex11.jpg"></center>'
-	'A patient comes through the door and takes off his pants to show you his flaccid penis. He asks you to help him, as he can''t seem to get an erection and it''s causing him depression. You realize that it''s all just a silly game and that he hopes to fuck you, but you still feel sorry for him. You wonder what caused him to come up with this plan, and decide it might just be that he has no luck with girls, and if today is not his lucky day, he may jump out of the window.'
+	'A patient comes through the door and takes off his pants to show you his flaccid penis. He asks you to help him, as he can''t seem to get an erection and it''s causing him depression. You realize that it''s all just a silly game and that he hopes to fuck you, but you still feel sorry for him. You wonder what caused him to come up with this plan and decide it might just be that he has no luck with girls, and if today is not his lucky day, he may jump out of the window.'
 	
 	act 'Oust him':
 		medcn_exp += rand (0,1) 
@@ -256,7 +256,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/clinic/sex/hospsex12.jpg"></center>'
-	'A pretty patient comes into the room and the doctor tries to examine her. Then she touches his trousers near his poorly hidden erection. The doctor glances at you with a question in his eyes.'
+	'A pretty patient comes into the room, and the doctor tries to examine her. Then she touches his trousers near his poorly hidden erection. The doctor glances at you with a question in his eyes.'
 	
 	act 'Ask if she actually needs treatment':medcn_exp += rand (0,1) & gt 'WorkHosp', 'start'
     

+ 1 - 1
locations/parkBimbo.qsrc

@@ -32,7 +32,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pos2':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/park/sex/parkbimbo2.jpg"></center>'
 	'You grab hold of the old man''s hand, pull him up and over to a tree. You drop to your knees and start sucking his cock at once. He was taken aback at first and started to protest but as your warm wet mouth began sucking his cock, he stopped protesting.'
 	'You begin sucking him with earnest and fondling his balls with your hand.'
-	'You don''t have long to wait when you feel the hot spurts of his seamen shooting into your mouth.'
+	'You don''t have long to wait when you feel the hot spurts of his semen shooting into your mouth.'
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'

+ 2 - 2
locations/pav_aptcourtev.qsrc

@@ -1623,7 +1623,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'two_boys':
 						act 'Back on your knees':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/events/sex/apartment/ncum.jpg"></center>'
-							'Several minutes go by until they both starting grunting, obviously getting close to cumming. They pull out of you as one of them tells you. "Get on your knees whore and open your mouth." You do as you are told, they both step up close with the dicks right in your facing jerking them a few times. Both of them starting cumming at almost the same time, some of it going in your mouth and on your tongue, most of the rest splattering your face with strains of thick seamen. Once they finish cumming on you, the first one grabs you by the arm and pulls you to your feet. Drags you over to the door, while his friend opens it and then they shove you out into the hall naked, with your face covered in their cum. "Get lost whore!" With that, they close the door in your face.'
+							'Several minutes go by until they both starting grunting, obviously getting close to cumming. They pull out of you as one of them tells you. "Get on your knees whore and open your mouth." You do as you are told, they both step up close with the dicks right in your facing jerking them a few times. Both of them starting cumming at almost the same time, some of it going in your mouth and on your tongue, most of the rest splattering your face with strains of thick semen. Once they finish cumming on you, the first one grabs you by the arm and pulls you to your feet. Drags you over to the door, while his friend opens it and then they shove you out into the hall naked, with your face covered in their cum. "Get lost whore!" With that, they close the door in your face.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'group', 'humiliation'
 							if pavapt_boyrand = 1:
 								gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'A122', 1
@@ -1689,7 +1689,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'two_boys':
 									act 'Back on your knees':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/events/sex/apartment/ncum.jpg"></center>'
-										'Several minutes go by until they both starting grunting, obviously getting close to cumming. They pull out of you as one of them tells you. "Get on your knees whore and open your mouth." You do as you are told, they both step up close with the dicks right in your facing jerking them a few times. Both of them starting cumming at almost the same time, some of it going in your mouth and on your tongue, most of the rest splattering your face with strains of thick seamen. Once they finish cumming on you, the first one grabs you by the arm and pulls you to your feet. Drags you over to the door, while his friend opens it and then they shove you out into the hall naked, with your face covered in their cum. "Get lost whore!" With that, they close the door in your face.'
+										'Several minutes go by until they both starting grunting, obviously getting close to cumming. They pull out of you as one of them tells you. "Get on your knees whore and open your mouth." You do as you are told, they both step up close with the dicks right in your facing jerking them a few times. Both of them starting cumming at almost the same time, some of it going in your mouth and on your tongue, most of the rest splattering your face with strains of thick semen. Once they finish cumming on you, the first one grabs you by the arm and pulls you to your feet. Drags you over to the door, while his friend opens it and then they shove you out into the hall naked, with your face covered in their cum. "Get lost whore!" With that, they close the door in your face.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'sub', 'group', 'humiliation'
 										if pavapt_boyrand = 1:
 											gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'A122', 1

+ 8 - 8
locations/volAndGev.qsrc

@@ -15,20 +15,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	if andGevknow = 0:
 		bumpK += 1
 		if pcs_apprnc < 60:
-			'The guy sneered at you and muttered something about a bow-legged cow.'
+			'The guy sneers at you and mutters something about a bow-legged cow.'
 		else
-			'The guy smiled, looking at you.'
+			'The guy smiles, looking at you.'
 		end
 
 		act 'Swear at him':
 			cls
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You cursed at the guy for roughly pushing you.'
+			'You curse at the guy for roughly pushing you.'
 
 			if pcs_apprnc < 60:	
-				'The guy flipped you the bird and smiled.'
+				'The guy flips you the bird and smiles.'
 			else
-				'The guy just looked at you and shrugged.'
+				'The guy just looks at you and shrugs.'
 			end
 
 			act 'Leave':gt 'gdksport', 'start'
@@ -39,12 +39,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		andGevknow = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 	
-		'You finally had enough. The same guy pushed you again and you lost it. You grabbed the ball and whipped it at him with all your strength, aiming at the back of his head.'
+		'You finally have had enough. The same guy pushes you again, and you lose it. You grab the ball and whip it at him with all your strength, aiming at the back of his head.'
 		if rand(0,2) = 2:
 			AndRev = 1
-			'Unfortunately, he turned towards you just as you released the ball and it connected right on his nose. The cracking sound of his nose breaking could be clearly heard. Fortunately for you, no one really liked him and they all declared they saw nothing.'
+			'Unfortunately, he turns towards you just as you release the ball and it connects right with his nose. The cracking sound of his nose breaking can be clearly heard. Fortunately for you, no one really liked him and they all declare they saw nothing.'
 		else
-			'The ball connected with the back of his head and sent him head over heels. By the time he got back on his feet, you managed to make it look like you had been doing something else the entire time.'
+			'The ball connects with the back of his head and sends him head over heels. By the time he gets back on his feet, you manage to make it look like you had been doing something else the entire time.'
 		end
 	end
 

+ 169 - 165
locations/webcam_site.qsrc

@@ -31,7 +31,7 @@ if $args[0] = 'start':
 end
 
 !-----------------------------------------------!
-!------Registration page online chat---------!
+!--------Registration page online chat----------!
 !-----------------------------------------------!
 $webcam_rega = {
 	cls
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ $webcam_rega = {
 }
 
 !-----------------------------------------------!
-!-------Page statistics online chat---------!
+!---------Page statistics online chat-----------!
 !-----------------------------------------------!
 $webcam_stat = {
 	cls
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ $webcam_stat = {
 	act 'Return': gt 'webcam_site'
 }
 !-----------------------------------------------!
-!-------Help page online chat-------------!
+!-------------Help page online chat-------------!
 !-----------------------------------------------!
 $webcam_help = {
 	cls
@@ -83,29 +83,35 @@ $webcam_help = {
 	gs'stat'
 	'
 	Description of service:
-	Video conference - this software, allowing users to conduct real-time video chat via the Web-Camera
+	Video conference - this software allows users to conduct real-time video chat via the Web-Camera
 	After registering, you will be able to broadcast shows, receiving tips from customers.
-	In order to receive more tips you need attract more users.
+	In order to receive more tips, you need attract more users.
 	One show per day only.
-	Things that will increasing your tips: 
-	Use dildos, available from your local sex shop (The larger the better)
-	Self-fisting earns lots of tips, but for this you need lubricant and the ability to take it, otherwise you will cause yourself a lot of pain and you will not be able to put on a show when in pain.
+	Things that will increase your tips: 
+	Use dildos, available from your local sex shop (The larger the better).
+	Self-fisting earns lots of tips, but for this you need lubricant and the ability to take it. Otherwise, you will cause yourself a lot of pain, and you will not be able to put on a show when in pain.
 	Orgasming during a show will earn you a bonus tip.
 	'
 	act 'To main': gt 'webcam_site'
 }
 
 !-----------------------------------------------!
-!--------Home online chat-----------!
+!--------------Home online chat-----------------!
 !-----------------------------------------------!
 
 $webcam_index = {
 	!act 'Exit': gt 'Komp', 'start'	
-	if week < 6 and hour < 19 or week >= 6 and hour < 15:
-		if week < 6 and hour >= 7 and hour < 19: 'It is too early to make a show, most spectators are at work.'
-		if week >= 6 and hour >= 7 and hour < 15: 'It is too early to make a show, most viewers still sleep off after the working week.'	
-		if hour >= 0 and hour < 7: 'Even so late. You do not want to scare away all their viewers sleepy views.'	
-		if pav_slut <= 50: 'I hesitate to get up... every. Let just before the camera.'
+	if hour < 15 or (week < 6 and hour < 19):
+		if hour < 7:
+			'It''s too late to start a show. Too many people are asleep.'
+		else:
+			if week < 6:
+				'It''s too early to start a show. Too many people are at work.'
+			else:
+				'Even if it''s the weekend, it''s still too early to start a show.'
+			end
+		end	
+		if pav_slut <= 50: 'Maybe that''s for the best. You''re not sure you should be risking someone recognizing you anyway.'
 	else
 		my_show_show = 0
 		my_show_tits = 0
@@ -126,7 +132,7 @@ $webcam_index = {
 	end
 }
 !-----------------------------------------------!
-!---------Webcam shows online chat----------------!
+!---------Webcam shows online chat--------------!
 !-----------------------------------------------!
 !if $args[0] = 'show':
 $webcam_show = {
@@ -139,7 +145,7 @@ $webcam_show = {
 	if show_counter = 4:
 		*clr
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/end'+rand(1,2)+'.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You are already super tired and the viewers need to take a breather, after your super-duper show. It''s time to call it a day.'
+		'You are already super tired, and the viewers need to take a breather after your super-duper show. It''s time to call it a day.'
 
 		
 		'You collected <<my_show_tip_all>> <b>₽</b> during today''s show.'
@@ -158,7 +164,7 @@ $webcam_show = {
 		act 'Logout': gt 'webcam_site'
 	end	
 !------------------------------!
-!-------Continued show--------!
+!--------Continued show--------!
 !------------------------------!
 	if show_counter > 0 and show_counter < 4:
 		gs'stat'
@@ -176,11 +182,11 @@ $webcam_show = {
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/show'+rand(1,4)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-				'Are you satisfied with the way, to your crotch was right in the camera against, and provides all viewers can see everything as it should be.'
+				'You bring your crotch right against the camera and let all your viewers see everything is as it should be.'
 				
 				my_show_tip = rand(50, 400)
 				
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				my_show_show = 1
 				
@@ -189,18 +195,18 @@ $webcam_show = {
 			end	
 		end
 !------------------------------!
-!-----------Boobs-------------!
+!------------Boobs-------------!
 !------------------------------!			
 		if my_show_tits = 0:
-			act 'Play with the breast':
+			act 'Play with your breasts':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/tits'+rand(1,4)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-				'At the request of the audience you are playing with her breasts.'
+				'At the request of the audience, you play with your breasts.'
 				
 				my_show_tip = rand(100, 400)
 				
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				my_show_tits = 1
 				webcam_show_tits +=1
@@ -210,27 +216,27 @@ $webcam_show = {
 			end
 		end			
 !------------------------------!
-!---------Masturbation----------!
+!---------Masturbation---------!
 !------------------------------!	
 		if my_show_mast = 0:
 			act 'Masturbate':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/mast'+rand(1,9)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-				'You caress stroking her pussy and ass, fumble clitoris and nipples wriggle.'
+				'You caress your pussy and ass, stroke your clitoris and rub your nipples.'
 				
 				my_show_tip = rand(100, 500)
 				pcs_horny += 30
 				
 				!orgasm-Bonus Money				
 				if pcs_horny > 100:
-					'Soon you bring themselves to the limit and ends violently. Counter tips from this sharply increases.'
+					'Soon you bring yourself to the limit and cum violently. Your tips sharply increase when this happens.'
 					webcam_show_orgazm +=1
 					my_show_tip += rand(50, 500)
 					pcs_horny = 0
 				end
 				
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				my_show_mast = 1
 				webcam_show_mast +=1
@@ -240,49 +246,51 @@ $webcam_show = {
 			end
 		end
 !-----------------------------------------------!
-!-----------Rubber cock in her mouth----------------!
+!-----------Rubber cock in her mouth------------!
 !-----------------------------------------------!	
-		if pcs_throat >= 1 and dildo = 1 and my_show_throat = 0:
+		!! This was updated to include all the dildos as it previously was missing some. Most of the code was left
+		!! as is with the additional dildos just merged into existing paths for simplicity. If this file is ever
+		!! added back to the game, there should probably be separate branches for all dildo sizes. At the very
+		!! least, they should give different tip amounts
+		if my_show_throat = 0 and (dildo = 1 or (pcs_throat >= 15 and middildo = 1) or (pcs_throat >= 20 and largedildo = 1) or (pcs_throat >= 25 and bigdildo = 1) or (pcs_throat >= 30 and extradildo = 1) or (pcs_throat >= 35 and superdildo = 1) or (pcs_throat >= 40 and maddildo = 1)):
 			act 'Dildo in the mouth':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
-				!Average dildo 15see
-				if pcs_throat >= 15 and pcs_throat < 25 and middildo = 1:
-					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/midthroat'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'	
-					'Did you get your big 15See dildos and start licking, suck at, shove in your mouth.'
+				!!Enormous dildos 35cm and 40cm
+				if (pcs_throat >= 35 and superdildo = 1) or (pcs_throat >= 40 and maddildo = 1):
+					*clr
+					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/extrthroat'+rand(1,2)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
+
+					'You take out your enormous ' + iif(pcs_throat >= 40 and maddildo = 1, '40cm', '35cm') + ' dildo and start trusting it into your throat.'
 					
-					my_show_tip = rand(100, 500)
-					if pcs_throat < 25: pcs_throat += 1
-				end
-				!Big Dildo 25see
-				if pcs_throat >= 25 and pcs_throat < 35 and bigdildo = 1:
+					my_show_tip = rand(600, 1400)
+					if pcs_throat < 40: pcs_throat += 1
+				!!Giant dildos 25cm and 30cm
+				elseif (pcs_throat >= 25 and bigdildo = 1) or (pcs_throat >= 30 and extradildo = 1):
 					*clr
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/bigthroat'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
 
-					'Did you get a giant 25See dildo and begin rhythmically to drive him in the throat.'
+					'You get out your giant ' + iif(pcs_throat >= 30 and extradildo = 1, '30cm', '25cm') + ' dildo and begin to rhythmically drive it into your throat.'
 					
 					my_show_tip = rand(500, 1000)
-					if pcs_throat < 35: pcs_throat += 1
-				end
-				!Huge Dildo 40see
-				if pcs_throat >= 35 and maddildo = 1:
-					*clr
-					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/extrthroat'+rand(1,2)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
-
-					'You took out his extremely giant 40See dildo and start poking him in the throat.'
+					if pcs_throat < 30 or (pcs_throat < 35 and extradildo = 1): pcs_throat += 1
+				!!Big dildos 15cm and 20cm
+				elseif (pcs_throat >= 15 and middildo = 1) or (pcs_throat >= 20 and largedildo = 1):
+					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/midthroat'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'	
+					'You get out your big ' + iif(pcs_throat >= 20 and largedildo = 1, '20cm', '15cm') + ' dildo and start licking it, sucking it, and shoving it into your mouth.'
 					
-					my_show_tip = rand(600, 1400)
-				end
-				!normal dildo
-				if pcs_throat < 15 and dildo = 1:
+					my_show_tip = rand(100, 500)
+					if pcs_throat < 20 or (pcs_throat < 25 and largedildo = 1): pcs_throat += 1
+				!!Normal dildo 10cm
+				else:
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/throat'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-					'Did you get your normal dildo and start to gently suck.'
+					'You get out your 10cm dildo and start to gently suck it.'
 					
 					my_show_tip = rand(100, 500)
-					pcs_throat += 1
+					if pcs_throat < 15: pcs_throat += 1
 				end
 				
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				my_show_throat = 1
 				webcam_show_throat +=1
@@ -292,58 +300,60 @@ $webcam_show = {
 			end	
 		end		
 !-----------------------------------------------!
-!---------Rubber dick in pussy----------------!
+!-------------Rubber dick in pussy--------------!
 !-----------------------------------------------!
-		if vgape < 3 and pcs_vag >= 1 and dildo = 1 and my_show_pussy = 0:
+		!! This was updated to include all the dildos as it previously was missing some. Most of the code was left
+		!! as is with the additional dildos just merged into existing paths for simplicity. If this file is ever
+		!! added back to the game, there should probably be separate branches for all dildo sizes. At the very
+		!! least, they should give different tip amounts
+		if vgape < 3 and my_show_pussy = 0 and (dildo = 1 or (pcs_vag >= 15 and middildo = 1) or (pcs_vag >= 20 and largedildo = 1) or (pcs_vag >= 25 and bigdildo = 1) or (pcs_vag >= 30 and extradildo = 1) or (pcs_vag >= 35 and superdildo = 1) or (pcs_vag >= 40 and maddildo = 1)):
 			act 'Dildo in the pussy':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
-				!Average dildo 15see
-				if pcs_vag >= 15 and pcs_vag < 25 and middildo = 1:
-					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/midvagin'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'	
-					'Did you get my middle 15See dildo and begin rhythmic drive it into pussy.'
+				!!Enormous dildos 35cm and 40cm
+				if (pcs_vag >= 35 and superdildo = 1) or (pcs_vag >= 40 and maddildo = 1):
+					*clr
+					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/extrvagin'+rand(1,2)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
+
+					'You take out your enormous ' + iif(pcs_vag >= 40 and maddildo = 1, '40cm', '35cm') + ' dildo and start thrusting it into your pussy.'
 					
-					my_show_tip = rand(200, 700)
-					if pcs_vag < 25: pcs_vag += 1
-				end
-				!Big Dildo 25see
-				if pcs_vag >= 25 and pcs_vag < 35 and bigdildo = 1:
+					my_show_tip = rand(700, 1400)
+					if pcs_vag < 40: pcs_vag += 1
+				!!Giant dildos 25cm and 30cm
+				elseif (pcs_vag >= 25 and bigdildo = 1) or (pcs_vag >= 30 and extradildo = 1):
 					*clr
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/bigvagin'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
 
-					'Did you get your big 25See dildo and begin rhythmic drive it into pussy.'
+					'You get out your giant ' + iif(pcs_vag >= 30 and extradildo = 1, '30cm', '25cm') + ' dildo and begin rhythmically driving it into your pussy.'
 					
 					my_show_tip = rand(400, 800)
-					if pcs_vag < 35: pcs_vag += 1
-				end
-				!a giant dildo 40see
-				if pcs_vag >= 35 and maddildo = 1:
-					*clr
-					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/extrvagin'+rand(1,2)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
-
-					'You took out his extremely giant 40See dildo and start poking him in the pussy.'
+					if pcs_vag < 30 or (pcs_vag < 35 and extradildo = 1): pcs_vag += 1
+				!!Big dildos 15cm and 20cm
+				elseif (pcs_vag >= 15 and middildo = 1) or (pcs_vag >= 20 and largedildo = 1):
+					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/midvagin'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'	
+					'You get out your big ' + iif(pcs_vag >= 20 and largedildo = 1, '20cm', '15cm') + ' dildo and begin rhythmically driving it into your pussy.'
 					
-					my_show_tip = rand(700, 1400)
-				end
-				!normal dildo
-				if pcs_vag < 15 and dildo = 1:
+					my_show_tip = rand(200, 700)
+					if pcs_vag < 20 or (pcs_vag < 25 and largedildo = 1): pcs_vag += 1
+				!!Normal dildo 10cm
+				else:
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/vagin'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-					'Did you get your normal dildo and begin rhythmic drive it into pussy.'
+					'You get out your 10cm dildo and begin rhythmically driving it into your pussy.'
 					
 					my_show_tip = rand(100, 600)
-					pcs_vag += 1
+					if pcs_vag < 15: pcs_vag += 1
 				end
 				
 				pcs_horny += 30
 				!orgasm-Bonus Money
 				if pcs_horny > 100:
-					'Soon you bring themselves to the limit and ends violently. Counter tips from this sharply increases.'
+					'Soon you bring yourself to the limit and cum violently. Your tips sharply increase when this happens.'
 					webcam_show_orgazm +=1
 					my_show_tip += rand(100, 500)
 					pcs_horny = 0
 				end	
 				
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				my_show_pussy = 1
 				webcam_show_pussy +=1
@@ -355,67 +365,67 @@ $webcam_show = {
 !-----------------------------------------------!
 !---------Rubber dick in the ass----------------!
 !-----------------------------------------------!		
-		if agape < 3 and pcs_ass => 1 and dildo = 1 and my_show_anus = 0:
+		!! This was updated to include all the dildos as it previously was missing some. Most of the code was left
+		!! as is with the additional dildos just merged into existing paths for simplicity. If this file is ever
+		!! added back to the game, there should probably be separate branches for all dildo sizes. At the very
+		!! least, they should give different tip amounts
+		if agape < 3  and my_show_anus = 0 and (dildo = 1 or (pcs_ass >= 15 and middildo = 1) or (pcs_ass >= 20 and largedildo = 1) or (pcs_ass >= 25 and bigdildo = 1) or (pcs_ass >= 30 and extradildo = 1) or (pcs_ass >= 35 and superdildo = 1) or (pcs_ass >= 40 and maddildo = 1)):
 			act 'Dildo in the ass':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
-				'You parted my buttocks began to massage the anus with your fingers, first one, then two.'
+				'You part your buttocks' + iif(analplugin = 1, ', remove your anal plug,', '') + ' and begin to massage your anus with your fingers, first one, then two.'
 				!Butt plug
-				if analplugin = 1:
-					analplugin = 0
-					'You pulled out of your ass anal plug,'
-				end
+				analplugin = 0
 				!grease
 				if lubri > 0:
 					lubri -= 1
-					'You squeezed anal grease on his hand and began to spread his ass. After that, you''re a little smeared dildo.'
+					'You squeeze some lube onto your hand and begin to spread it on your hole. After that, you smear a little on your dildo.'
 				end
-				!Average dildo 15see
-				if pcs_ass >= 15 and pcs_ass < 25 and middildo = 1:
-					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/midanal'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'	
-					'Did you get my middle 15See dildo and begin rhythmic drive it in the ass.'
+					if pcs_ass < 40: pcs_ass += 1
+				!!Giant dildos 25cm and 30cm
+				elseif (pcs_ass >= 25 and bigdildo = 1) or (pcs_ass >= 30 and extradildo = 1):
+					*clr
+					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/extranal'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
+
+					'You then take your enormous ' + iif(pcs_ass >= 40 and maddildo = 1, '40cm', '35cm') + ' dildo and start thrusting it into your ass.'
 					
-					my_show_tip = rand(300, 800)
-					if pcs_ass < 25: pcs_ass += 1
-				end
-				!Big Dildo 25see
-				if pcs_ass >= 25 and pcs_ass < 35 and bigdildo = 1:
+					my_show_tip = rand(700, 1400)
+					if pcs_ass < 30 or (pcs_ass < 35 and extradildo = 1): pcs_ass += 1
+				!!Big dildos 15cm and 20cm
+				elseif (pcs_ass >= 15 and middildo = 1) or (pcs_ass >= 20 and largedildo = 1):
 					*clr
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/biganal'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
 
-					'Did you get your big 25See dildo and begin rhythmic drive it in the ass.'
+					'You then take your giant ' + iif(pcs_ass >= 30 and extradildo = 1, '30cm', '25cm') + ' dildo and begin rhythmically driving it into your ass.'
 			
 					my_show_tip = rand(500, 1000)
 					if pcs_ass < 35: pcs_ass += 1
-				end
-				!a giant dildo 40see
-				if pcs_ass >= 35 and maddildo = 1:
-					*clr
-					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/extranal'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'		
-
-					'You took out his extremely giant 40See dildo and start poking him in the ass.'
+				!Average dildo 15cm
+				elseif pcs_ass >= 15 and middildo = 1:
+					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/midanal'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'	
+					'You then take your big ' + iif(pcs_ass >= 20 and largedildo = 1, '20cm', '15cm') + ' dildo and begin rhythmically driving it into your ass.'
 					
-					my_show_tip = rand(700, 1400)
-				end
-				!normal dildo
-				if pcs_ass < 15 and dildo = 1:
+					my_show_tip = rand(300, 800)
+					if pcs_ass < 20 or (pcs_ass < 25 and largedildo = 1): pcs_ass += 1
+				!normal dildo 10cm
+				else:
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/anal'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-					'Did you get your normal dildo and begin rhythmic drive it in the ass.'
+					'You then take your 10cm dildo and begin rhythmically driving it into your ass.'
 
 					my_show_tip = rand(100, 500)
-					pcs_ass += 1
+					if pcs_ass < 15: pcs_ass += 1
 				end
 				
 				pcs_horny += 30
 				!orgasm-Bonus Money
 				if pcs_horny > 100:
-					'Soon you bring themselves to the limit and ends violently. Counter tips from this sharply increases.'
+					'Soon you bring yourself to the limit and cum violently. Your tips sharply increase when this happens.'
 					webcam_show_orgazm +=1
 					my_show_tip += rand(100, 500)
 					pcs_horny = 0
 				end	
 				
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				my_show_anus = 1
 				webcam_show_anus +=1
@@ -425,30 +435,29 @@ $webcam_show = {
 			end	
 		end	
 !------------------------------!
-!----Double penetration-----!
-!------------------------------!		
-		if agape < 3 and vgape < 3 and pcs_ass >= 20 and pcs_vag >= 20 and my_show_dp = 0:
+!------Double penetration------!
+!------------------------------!
+		!! Might be good to differentiate between different dildo sizes here. In particular, maybe there should
+		!! be different tip amounts for larger dildos like there are for the single dildo actions.
+		if agape < 3 and vgape < 3 and my_show_dp = 0 and ((pcs_ass >= 15 and pcs_vag >= 15 and dildo = 1 and middildo = 1) or (pcs_ass >= 20 and pcs_vag >= 20 and largedildo = 1 and (middildo = 1 or dildo = 1)) or (pcs_ass >= 25 and pcs_vag >= 25 and bigdildo = 1 and (largedildo = 1 or middildo = 1 or dildo = 1)) or (pcs_ass >= 30 and pcs_vag >= 30 and extradildo = 1 and (bigdildo = 1 or largedildo = 1 or middildo = 1 or dildo = 1)) or (pcs_ass >= 35 and pcs_vag >= 35 and superdildo = 1 and (extradildo = 1 or bigdildo = 1 or largedildo = 1 or middildo = 1 or dildo = 1)) or (pcs_ass >= 40 and pcs_vag >= 40 and maddildo = 1 and (superdildo = 1 or extradildo = 1 or bigdildo = 1 or largedildo = 1 or middildo = 1 or dildo = 1))):
 			act 'Dildo in ass and pussy':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/toys/dp'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-				'You parted their charms began massaging the hole with your fingers, first pussy, Then the ass.'
+				'You part your legs' + iif(analplugin = 1, ', remove your anal plug,', '') + ' and begin massaging yourself with your fingers, first your pussy, then your ass.'
 				!Butt plug
-				if analplugin = 1:
-					analplugin = 0
-					'You pulled out of your ass anal plug,'
-				end
+				analplugin = 0
 				!grease
 				if lubri > 0:
 					lubri -= 1
-					'You squeezed grease on his hand and began to spread its charms.'
+					'You then squeeze some lube onto your hand and begin to spread it on them.'
 				end
-					'Thrusting his pisku dildo and ass, rhythmically began to fuck her holes.'
+				'Now ready, you grab a pair of dildos and begin to rhythmically fuck your holes.'
 				
 				pcs_horny += 30
 				!orgasm-Bonus Money
 				if pcs_horny > 100:
-					'Soon you bring themselves to orgasm and not hiding emotions violently ends. Counter tips from this sharply increases.'
+					'Soon you bring yourself to the limit and cum violently. Your tips sharply increase when this happens.'
 					webcam_show_orgazm +=1
 					my_show_tip += rand(100, 600)
 					pcs_horny = 0
@@ -457,105 +466,100 @@ $webcam_show = {
 				my_show_tip = rand(600, 1600)
 				my_show_dp = 1
 				webcam_show_dp +=1
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				cla
 				act 'Further': dynamic $webcam_show
 			end	
 		end			
 !------------------------------!
-!---------Hand in the ass----------!
+!-------Hand in the ass--------!
 !------------------------------!		
 		if agape < 3 and pcs_ass >= 30 and my_show_afisting = 0:
-			act 'Anal Fisting':
+			act 'Anal fisting':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/afist'+rand(1,2)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-				'You parted their charms began massaging the hole with your fingers, first one, then two.'
+				'You part your buttocks' + iif(analplugin = 1, ', remove your anal plug,', '') + ' and begin to massage your anus with your fingers, first one, then two.'
 				!Butt plug
-				if analplugin = 1:
-					analplugin = 0
-					'You pulled out of your ass anal plug,'
-				end
+				analplugin = 0
 				!grease
 				if lubri = 0: agape = 3
 				if lubri > 0:
 					lubri -= 1
-					'You squeezed anal grease on his hand and began to spread his ass.'
+					'You squeeze some lube onto your hand and begin to spread it on your ass.'
 				end
-					'You slowly began to introduce his hand yourself in the ass.'
+				'Now ready, you slowly begin to push more and more of your hand inside.'
 				
 				my_show_tip = rand(400, 1800)
 				my_show_afisting = 1
 				webcam_show_afisting +=1
 				if pcs_ass <= 30: pcs_ass +=1
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				cla
 				act 'Further': dynamic $webcam_show
 			end	
 		end	
 !------------------------------!
-!---------Hand in pussy---------!
+!---------Hand in pussy--------!
 !------------------------------!
 		if vgape < 3 and pcs_vag >= 30 and my_show_vfisting = 0:
-			act 'Fisting vaginal':
+			act 'Vaginal fisting':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/vfist'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-				'You parted their charms began massaging the hole with your fingers, first one, then two.'
+				'You part your legs and begin massaging your hole with your fingers, first one, then two.'
 			
 				!grease
 				if lubri = 0: vgape = 3
 				if lubri > 0:
 					lubri -= 1
-					'You squeezed grease on his hand and began to smear her pussy.'
+					'You squeeze some lube onto your hand and began to smear it on your pussy.'
 				end
-					'You slowly began to introduce his hand himself in pussy.'
+				'Now ready, you slowly begin to push more and more of your hand inside.'
 		
 				my_show_tip = rand(400, 1600)
 				my_show_vfisting = 1
 				webcam_show_vfisting +=1
 				if pcs_vag <= 30: pcs_vag +=1
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				cla
 				act 'Further': dynamic $webcam_show
 			end	
 		end		
 !------------------------------!
-!---------Sex - Vasya---------!
+!---------Sex - Vasily---------!
 !------------------------------!
 		if $loc='shulga_room' and npc_rel['A11'] >= 100 and week >= 6 and hour >= 15 and vgape < 3 and agape < 3 and pcs_vag >= 1 and my_show_sex = 0:
-			act 'Call Vasya and arrange a sex show':
+			act 'Call Vasily and arrange a sex show':
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/sex'+rand(1,5)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
+				'Vasily ' + iif(analplugin = 1, 'pulls your anal plug out of your ass and ', '') + 'begins to stroke between your legs, massaging your holes with his fingers.'	
 				!Butt plug
-				if analplugin = 1:
-					analplugin = 0
-					'Vaska pulled out of your ass anal plug.'
-				end
-				'Basil began to stroke your charms, he began massaging the hole with your fingers.'	
+				analplugin = 0
 				!grease
 				if lubri = 0: vgape = 1
 				if lubri > 0:
 					lubri -= 1
 					'He forced lubrication his arms and began to lubricate your charms'
 				end
-					'30 minutes you fucked with him on camera. He wanted to spit you like, sometimes pochityvaya chat and perform the whim of spectators: fucked something quickly, then slowly, he thrusts his dick in pussy, in the ass, Do not forget about your mouth.'
-					'Viewers liked all the action, count-in increased, gratuities fell even faster'
+				'For 30 minutes, the two of you fuck on camera, honoring the chat and performing the whims of spectators. Sometimes he fucks you quickly, sometimes slowly, sometimes in your pussy, sometimes in your ass. You even blow him for a bit.'
 					
 				pcs_horny += 30
 				!orgasm-Bonus Money
 				if pcs_horny > 100:
-					'Soon he bring you to orgasm and you''re not hiding emotions violently ends. Counter tips from this sharply increases.'
+					'Soon he bring you to orgasm, and you cum violently. Your tips sharply increase when this happens.'
 					webcam_show_orgazm +=1
 					my_show_tip += rand(100, 500)
 					pcs_horny = 0
 				end		
+
+				'Your viewers like all the action. Your view count increases, and your tips rise even faster.'
 		
 				my_show_tip = rand(800, 2000)
 				my_show_sex = 1
 				webcam_show_sex +=1
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				cla
 				act 'Further': dynamic $webcam_show
 			end	
@@ -568,11 +572,11 @@ $webcam_show = {
 				gs'stat'
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/squirt'+rand(1,2)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-				'At the request of the audience you skvirtuete directly at the camera.'
+				'At the request of the audience, you squirt directly at the camera.'
 				
 				my_show_tip = rand(400, 1200)
 				
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				my_show_squirt = 1
 				webcam_show_squirt +=1
@@ -582,17 +586,17 @@ $webcam_show = {
 			end
 		end			
 !------------------------------!
-!----------Bracing------------!
+!-----------Bracing------------!
 !------------------------------!			
 		if pcs_danc >= 50 and my_show_flex = 0:
 			act 'Bracing':
 				*clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/flex'+rand(1,3)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-				'You show the audience their flexibility.'
+				'You show your audience your flexibility.'
 				
 				my_show_tip = rand(pcs_dancero,pcs_dancero*2)
 				
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				my_show_flex = 1
 				webcam_show_flex +=1
@@ -603,10 +607,10 @@ $webcam_show = {
 		end		
 	end
 !------------------------------!
-!----------Start the show-----------!
+!-------Start the show---------!
 !------------------------------!	
 	if show_counter = 0:
-		'You turn on the webcam. It''s time to start the presentation!'
+		'You turn on the webcam. It''s time to start the show!'
 		
 		show_counter = 1
 		!if dyed and combed bonus money
@@ -619,17 +623,17 @@ $webcam_show = {
 		act 'Undress':
 			*clr
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/accessories/computer/webcam/undress'+rand(1,7)+'.mp4" ></video></center>'
-			'You take off her clothes.'
+			'You take off your clothes.'
 			
 			my_show_tip = rand(100, 200)
 			
-			'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+			'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 			
 			cla
 			act 'Further': dynamic $webcam_show
 		end	
 !------------------------------!
-!----------STRIPTEASE------------!
+!---------STRIPTEASE-----------!
 !------------------------------!		
 		if pcs_dancero > 10:
 			act 'Striptease':
@@ -640,7 +644,7 @@ $webcam_show = {
 				
 				!health check
 				if agape > 2 or vgape > 2 or pcs_sleep < 8:
-					'You do not feel good. You only manage to dance half as well, as usual.'
+					'You do not feel good. You only manage to dance half as well as you normally could.'
 					
 					my_show_tip_mod = 2
 				else
@@ -649,7 +653,7 @@ $webcam_show = {
 				
 				my_show_tip = (pcs_dancero + pcs_danc/2)/my_show_tip_mod
 				webcam_show_strip +=1
-				'For this little idea you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
+				'For this little idea, you have earned <<my_show_tip>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				
 				cla
 				act 'Further': dynamic $webcam_show

+ 70 - 80
locations/worksalon.qsrc

@@ -11,7 +11,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Beauty Salon</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/salon/salonwork.jpg"></center>'
-	'You show up to work and see your cowokers already working. You give them a friendly wave as you head over to your work station.'
+	'You show up to work and see your coworkers already working. You give them a friendly wave as you head over to your work station.'
 	salonjobrand = rand(0, 10)
 
 	if salonjobrand = 2 and pcs_apprnc > 80 and alla = 0:
@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	elseif salonjobrand = 3 and salonslut = 1:
 		cla
-		'As you head over to your workstation, your boss comes over and leans close to you. "Go into my office and take your clothes off, then bend over my desk. I will be there shortly." He says to you as he gives your ass a slap.'
+		'As you head over to your work station, your boss comes over and leans close to you. "Go into my office and take your clothes off, then bend over my desk. I will be there shortly." He says to you as he gives your ass a slap.'
 
 		gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			cla
 			minut += 30
 			masha += 1
-			'Masha and you talk during your lunch break, you talk about boys, clients, home life and other mundane topics.'
+			'Masha and you talk during your lunch break. You talk about boys, clients, home life and other mundane topics.'
 
 			act 'Move away':gt 'worksalon', 'start'
 		end
@@ -67,8 +67,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					*clr
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s7.jpg"></center>'
-					'After you eat your lunch you walk over to Masha. Placing your hands on your hips you tell her in a commanding voice. "Well why are you just sitting there? Get up and give me a massage, a nice slow one."'
-					'Masha immediately jumps up and waits for you to get undressed and lay down. Once you are naked and laying on the table Masha starts massaging you.'
+					'After you eat your lunch, you walk over to Masha. Placing your hands on your hips, you tell her in a commanding voice, "Well why are you just sitting there? Get up and give me a massage, a nice slow one."'
+					'Masha immediately jumps up and waits for you to get undressed and lie down. Once you are naked and lying on the table, Masha starts massaging you.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'massage', 30, 'dom'
 					gs 'stat'
 					
@@ -79,26 +79,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						picrand = rand(8, 9)
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-						if picrand = 8:
-							'Masha takes off her clothes and deftly leaps on the table and straddles you. She leans forward as she massages you shoulders till you can feel her breasts pressed against you back.'
-							
-							gs 'arousal', 'massage', 30, 'dom'
-							gs 'stat'
-					
-						else
-							'Masha takes off her clothes and deftly leaps on the table and starts to grind her ass against yours.'
-							
-							gs 'arousal', 'massage', 30, 'dom'
-							gs 'stat'
-					
-						end
+						'Masha takes off her clothes, deftly leaps on the table and ' + iif(picrand = 8, 'straddles you. She leans forward as she massages your shoulders till you can feel her breasts pressed against you back.', 'starts to grind her ass against yours.')
+						gs 'arousal', 'massage', 30, 'dom'
+						gs 'stat'
 
 						act 'Spread your legs':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s10.jpg"></center>'
-							'Several relaxing minutes later you feel much better from the massage, turning over you spread your legs. Masha smiles, you don''t even have to say a word, her mouth seeks out your pussy, as she begins to lick you.'
-							'She alternates from sliding her tongue inside of you, to flicking your clit with her tongue, licking your pussy all over, or just sucking on your clit, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
+							'Several relaxing minutes later, you feel much better from the massage. Turning over, you spread your legs. Masha smiles. You don''t even have to say a word. Her mouth seeks out your pussy, and she begins to lick you.'
+							'She alternates between sliding her tongue inside of you, flicking your clit with her tongue, licking your pussy all over, or just sucking on your clit, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
 
 							$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 							gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
@@ -111,8 +101,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s11.jpg"></center>'
-							'You roll over once more and get on your hands and knees, once more Masha knows exactly what to do and starts to lick your asshole with her tongue. Moments later she slides her tongue inside of your ass while her hand massages your clit.'
-							'You moan louder, your pussy becoming soaking wet as Masha massages your pussy and tongue fucks your ass. Within minutes you feel your body spasm and you orgasm hard. After your orgasm as you catch your breath, Masha licks all your pussy juices off you, leaving you clean.'
+							'You roll over once more and get on your hands and knees. Once more, Masha knows exactly what to do and starts to lick your asshole with her tongue. Moments later, she slides her tongue inside of your ass while her hand massages your clit.'
+							'You moan louder, your pussy becoming soaking wet as Masha massages it and tongue fucks your ass. Within minutes, you feel your body spasm, and you orgasm hard. After your orgasm as you catch your breath, Masha licks all your pussy juices off you, leaving you clean.'
 
 							$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 							gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
@@ -128,8 +118,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s10.jpg"></center>'
-						'You take off your clothes but instead of laying on your stomach, you lay on your back and spread your legs. Masha smiles, you don''t even have to say a word, her mouth seeks out your pussy, as she begins to lick you.'
-						'She alternates from sliding her tongue inside of you, to flicking your clit with her tongue, licking your pussy all over, or just sucking on your clit, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
+						'You take off your clothes, but instead of lying on your stomach, you lie on your back and spread your legs. Masha smiles. You don''t even have to say a word. Her mouth seeks out your pussy, and she begins to lick you.'
+						'She alternates between sliding her tongue inside of you, flicking your clit with her tongue, licking your pussy all over, or just sucking on your clit, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
 
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
@@ -143,8 +133,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s11.jpg"></center>'
-						'You roll over once more and get on your hands and knees, once more Masha knows exactly what to do and starts to lick your asshole with her tongue. Moments later she slides her tongue inside of your ass while her hand massages your clit.'
-						'You moan louder, your pussy becoming soaking wet as Masha massages your pussy and tongue fucks your ass. Within minutes you feel your body spasm and you orgasm hard. After your orgasm as you catch your breath, Masha licks all your pussy juices off you, leaving you clean.'
+						'You take off your clothes, but instead of lying on your stomach, you get on your hands and knees. Masha knows exactly what to do and starts to lick your asshole with her tongue. Moments later, she slides her tongue inside of your ass while her hand massages your clit.'
+						'You moan louder, your pussy becoming soaking wet as Masha massages it and tongue fucks your ass. Within minutes, you feel your body spasm, and you orgasm hard. After your orgasm as you catch your breath, Masha licks all your pussy juices off you, leaving you clean.'
 
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
@@ -166,10 +156,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				act 'Ask Masha to give you a massage (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'force'
 					cla
-					'After you eat your lunch you walk over to Masha you ask her. "Masha I am so tired, can you give me a massage? Please." Masha gives you a mischievous smile. "Yes of course, I will give you anything you want." You frown a bit at her treating you like a client.'
-					'"Was that sarcasm?" She looks down and bows her had slightly, looking more like a naughty child than anything. "Forgive me, that''s not what I meant. Please go into the booth and I''ll do what you want."'
+					'After you eat your lunch, you walk over to Masha and ask her, "Masha I am so tired, can you give me a massage? Please." Masha gives you a mischievous smile. "Yes of course, I will give you anything you want." You frown a bit at her treating you like a client.'
+					'"Was that sarcasm?" She looks down and bows her had slightly, looking more like a naughty child than anything. "Forgive me, that''s not what I meant. Please go into the booth, and I''ll do what you want."'
 
-					act 'Nafig this sick':gt 'worksalon', 'start'
+					act 'Change your mind':gt 'worksalon', 'start'
 
 					act 'Go into the booth':
 						cla
@@ -177,7 +167,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						masharab = 1
 						pcs_mood += 10
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s1.jpg"></center>'
-						'You undress and lie down on the table, Masha begins to give you a massage, her delicate hands glide over your body, you moan slightly as your body relaxes. A few minutes later Masha says, "Can you please roll over onto your back?"'
+						'You undress and lie down on the table. Masha begins to give you a massage, her delicate hands gliding over your body. You moan slightly as your body relaxes. A few minutes later, Masha says, "Can you please roll over onto your back?"'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'massage', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -187,8 +177,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							*clr
 							pcs_mood += 10
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s2.jpg"></center>'
-							'You roll over in silence, eyes closed. You continue to enjoy the massage for a few minutes, then Masha begins to squeeze your breasts. Almost at once you feel her tongue begin to lick your nipple.'
-							'You open your eyes looking at her, when you look at her Masha immediately lets go of you and falls to her knees on the floor and begs for forgiveness. "I''m sorry if that displeased you." It takes you a few moments to realize Masha is a sub and loves to obey.'
+							'You roll over in silence, eyes closed. You continue to enjoy the massage for a few minutes, then Masha begins to squeeze your breasts. Almost at once, you feel her tongue begin to lick your nipple.'
+							'You open your eyes looking at her. Seeing this, Masha immediately lets go of you, falling to her knees on the floor and begging for forgiveness. "I''m sorry if that displeased you." It takes you a few moments to realize Masha is a sub and loves to obey.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'massage', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -197,11 +187,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 								cla
 								*clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s5.jpg"></center>'
-								'Looking down at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it for everyone, they will take it the wrong way."'
-								'"I''m sorry I will not." she says, almost in tears.'
-								'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decided when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering your around and you will know, the rest of the time we are just friends.'
-								'There is a time and place for those games and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught we could be fired and I need this job.'
-								'Masha nods in understanding. "I understand, I work at night in a sex shop, the owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want." She says with a happy smile, you can''t help but smile too, she is just so damned eager to please.'
+								'You look down at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it for everyone. They will take it the wrong way."'
+								'"I''m sorry I will not," she says, almost in tears.'
+								'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decide when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering you around, and you will know. The rest of the time, we are just friends.'
+								'There are times and places for these games, and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught, we could be fired, and I need this job.'
+								'Masha nods. "I understand. I work at night in a sex shop. The owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want," she says with a happy smile. You can''t help but smile too. She is just so damned eager to please.'
 								'"Ok I might surprise you one of these nights then."'
 
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -214,7 +204,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 								cla
 								*clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s6.jpg"></center>'
-								'You just spread your legs. Masha smiles, you don''t even have to say a word, her mouth seeks out your pussy, as she begins to lick you. She alternates from sliding her tongue inside of you, to flicking your clit with her tongue, licking your pussy all over, or just sucking on your clit, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
+								'You just spread your legs. Masha smiles. You don''t even have to say a word. Her mouth seeks out your pussy, and she begins to lick you. She alternates between sliding her tongue inside of you, flicking your clit with her tongue, licking your pussy all over, or just sucking on your clit, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
 
 								$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 								gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
@@ -224,10 +214,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s5.jpg"></center>'
-									'After she brings you to an orgasm you look at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it to everyone, they will take it the wrong way."'
-									'"I''m sorry I will not." she says, almost in tears.'
-									'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decided when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering your around and you will know, the rest of the time we are just friends. There is a time and place for those games and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught we could be fired and I need this job.'
-									'Masha nods in understanding. "I understand, I work at night in a sex shop, the owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want." She says with a happy smile, you can''t help but smile too, she is just so damned eager to please. "Ok I might surprise you one of these nights then."'
+									'After she brings you to an orgasm, you look at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it to everyone. They will take it the wrong way."'
+									'"I''m sorry I will not," she says, almost in tears.'
+									'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decide when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering you around, and you will know. The rest of the time, we are just friends. There are times and places for these games, and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught, we could be fired, and I need this job.'
+									'Masha nods. "I understand. I work at night in a sex shop. The owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want" she says with a happy smile. You can''t help but smile too. She is just so damned eager to please. "Ok I might surprise you one of these nights then."'
 
 									gs 'arousal', 'end'
 									gs 'stat'
@@ -237,20 +227,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							end
 						end
 
-						act 'Ask why she stays':
+						act 'Ask why she''s doing this for you':
 							cla
 							'"Why are you doing this for me?" you ask.'
-							'Masha steps back and begins to babble, looking sad and scared at the same time. "I''m sorry, did I do something wrong? Tell me how you want me to talk or what you want me to do and I will do it."'
-							'"Well you can stop talking like ..." You almost say slave and then you realize, she talks like that because she loves to be treated like one. You think back to when you first meet her and forced her to fuck her boss and she obediently did everything that you told her.'
+							'Masha steps back and begins to babble, looking sad and scared at the same time. "I''m sorry, did I do something wrong? Tell me how you want me to talk or what you want me to do, and I will do it."'
+							'"Well you can stop talking like a..." You almost say slave, and then you realize: she talks like that because she loves to be treated like one. You think back to when you first met her and forced her to fuck her boss and she obediently did everything that you told her to do.'
 
 							act 'Talk to her':
 								cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s5.jpg"></center>'
-								'Looking at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it for everyone, they will take it the wrong way."'
-								'"I''m sorry I will not." she says, almost in tears.'
-								'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decided when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering your around and you will know, the rest of the time we are just friends, ok?'
-								'There is a time and place for those games and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught we could be fired and I need this job.'
-								'Masha nods in understanding. "I understand, I work at night in a sex shop, the owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want." She says with a happy smile, you can''t help but smile too, she is just so damned eager to please.'
+								'You look at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it for everyone. They will take it the wrong way."'
+								'"I''m sorry I will not," she says, almost in tears.'
+								'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decide when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering your around, and you will know. The rest of the time we are just friends, ok?'
+								'There are times and places for these games, and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught, we could be fired, and I need this job.'
+								'Masha nods. "I understand. I work at night in a sex shop. The owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want," she says with a happy smile. You can''t help but smile too. She is just so damned eager to please.'
 								'"Ok I might surprise you one of these nights then."'
 
 								act 'Leave':gt 'worksalon', 'start'
@@ -264,7 +254,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s3.jpg"></center>'
-									'You smile and then roll back over, getting on all fours you tell her. "Lick my pussy." Her mouth seeks out your pussy, as she begins to lick you. She alternates from sliding her tongue inside of you, to flicking your clit with her tongue, licking your pussy all over, or just sucking on your clit, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
+									'You smile. Getting on all fours, you tell her, "Lick my pussy." Her mouth seeks it out, and she begins to do as she''s been told. She alternates between sliding her tongue inside of you, flicking your clit with her tongue, licking your pussy all over, or just sucking on your clit, causing you to moan in pleasure.'
 
 									$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 									gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
@@ -274,11 +264,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 										cla
 										*clr
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s5.jpg"></center>'
-										'After she brings you to an orgasm you look at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it to everyone, they will take it the wrong way."'
-										'"I''m sorry I will not." she says, almost in tears.'
-										'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decided when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering your around and you will know, the rest of the time we are just friends.'
-										'There is a time and place for those games and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught we could be fired and I need this job.'
-										'Masha nods in understanding. "I understand, I work at night in a sex shop, the owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want." She says with a happy smile, you can''t help but smile too, she is just so damned eager to please.'
+										'After she brings you to an orgasm, you look at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it to everyone. They will take it the wrong way."'
+										'"I''m sorry I will not," she says, almost in tears.'
+										'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decide when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering your around, and you will know. The rest of the time, we are just friends.'
+										'There are times and places for these games, and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught, we could be fired, and I need this job.'
+										'Masha nods. "I understand. I work at night in a sex shop. The owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want," she says with a happy smile. You can''t help but smile too She is just so damned eager to please.'
 										'"Ok I might surprise you one of these nights then."'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -299,9 +289,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s4.jpg"></center>'
-									'After she has you good and worked up, you give her a new order. "Now lick my ass." Her tongue slides up from your pussy and she starts to lick your asshole with her tongue.'
+									'After coming to this realization, you decide to give her a new order. "Alright then, lick my ass."'
 									'Moments later she slides her tongue inside of your ass while her hand massages your clit. You moan louder, your pussy becoming soaking wet as Masha massages your pussy and tongue fucks your ass.'
-									'Within minutes you feel your body spasm and you orgasm hard. After your orgasm as you catch your breath, Masha licks all your pussy juices off you, leaving you clean.'
+									'Within minutes, you feel your body spasm and you orgasm hard. After your orgasm as you catch your breath, Masha licks all your pussy juices off you, leaving you clean.'
 
 									$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 									gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
@@ -311,11 +301,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 										cla
 										*clr
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/masha/sex/s5.jpg"></center>'
-										'After she brings you to an orgasm you look at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it to everyone, they will take it the wrong way."'
-										'"I''m sorry I will not." she says, almost in tears.'
-										'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decided when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering your around and you will know, the rest of the time we are just friends.'
-										'There is a time and place for those games and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught we could be fired and I need this job.'
-										'Masha nods in understanding. "I understand, I work at night in a sex shop, the owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want." She says with a happy smile, you can''t help but smile too, she is just so damned eager to please.'
+										'After she brings you to an orgasm, you look at her. "Masha I realize you love to obey, but do not do it to everyone. They will take it the wrong way."'
+										'"I''m sorry I will not," she says, almost in tears.'
+										'Sighing, you take on a gentler voice. "I''m not saying that you should never do it, just let me decide when I want you to be my little bitch. I will start ordering your around, and you will know. The rest of the time, we are just friends.'
+										'There are times and places for these games, and work isn''t one of them. If we got caught, we could be fired, and I need this job.'
+										'Masha nods. "I understand. I work at night in a sex shop. The owner lets me sleep there in a spare room in the basement. You can come over and use me as your slave any time you want," she says with a happy smile. You can''t help but smile too. She is just so damned eager to please.'
 										'"Ok I might surprise you one of these nights then."'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -352,7 +342,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '0':
 	salonpicrand = rand(0, 4)
 	picrand = salonpicrand + 30
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/salon/wmass<<salonpicrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'While massaging one of your clients, the guy flips over onto his back with a huge erection. He looks at you in expectantly, obviously waiting for you to service him.'
+	'While massaging one of your clients, the guy flips over onto his back with a huge erection. He looks at you expectantly, obviously waiting for you to service him.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist', 'easy'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -368,17 +358,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '0':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = '1':
-	'While massaging one of your clients, the guy asks. "Could I get an erotic beast massage from two girls at the same time? I''l pay you each 1,000 <b>₽</b>."'
+	'While massaging one of your clients, the guy asks, "Could I get an erotic breast massage from two girls at the same time? I''ll pay you each 1,000 <b>₽</b>."'
 	
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Refuse':gt 'worksalon', 'start'
 
-	act 'Go for the second girl':
+	act 'Go get a second girl':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		money += 1000
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/salon/wmass5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You think for a moment and then smile to him and nod. "Be right back." Then you leave and fetch Masha, once you start to undress she does as well, following your lead. You both crawl on him rubbing your breasts against him all over, while you take turns jerking him off.'
+		'You think for a moment and then smile to him and nod. "Be right back." Then you leave and fetch Masha. Once you start to undress, she does as well, following your lead. You both crawl on him, rubbing your breasts against him all over while you take turns jerking him off.'
 		gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'guy massaged at <<$month>> <<day>>, <<masstime>>h', rand(18,40)
 		gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 		
@@ -387,8 +377,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 			act 'Use Masha (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'force'
 				cla
-				'Seeing that this could take awhile and your eager to end this. You grab Masha by the hair and force her mouth down on his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick. She happly starts sucking him off as you pull on her hair to make her head bob up and down. He begins to moan louder and before long blows his load in Masha''s mouth, she swallows it down.'
-				'You pull her head up and she shows him her tongue, showing she swallowed it all. He grins and pulls out the money."Well worth it girls."'
+				'You see that this could take a while, and you''re eager to end this. You grab Masha by the hair and force her mouth down on his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> dick. She happily starts sucking him off as you pull on her hair to make her head bob up and down. He begins to moan louder and before long blows his load in Masha''s mouth. She swallows it down.'
+				'You pull her head up, and she shows him her tongue, confirming she swallowed it all. He grins and pulls out the money. "Well worth it girls."'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'worksalon', 'start'
 			end
@@ -402,9 +392,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 			sexstart = 1
 			sexvar = 6
 			gt 'podrsex', 'suck'
-			'You lower your mouth to his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock, you slip your lips tightly around his shaft as you take him into your mouth. You being to bob your head up and down sucking him off as one of your hands plays with his balls.'
-			'He begins to moan quickly and it doesn''t take long before he is blowing his load in your mouth. Hot spurts of seamen shot into your mouth. You quickly swallow it all down, lifting your head up and sticking out your tongue to show him that you swallowed it.'
-			'With a grin he pulls out the money and gives it to you. "Well worth the price."'
+			'You lower your mouth to his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock and slip your lips tightly around his shaft. You being to bob your head up and down, sucking him off as one of your hands plays with his balls.'
+			'He begins to moan quickly, and it doesn''t take long before he is blowing his load in your mouth. Hot spurts of semen shoot into your mouth. You quickly swallow it all down, lifting your head up and sticking out your tongue to show him.'
+			'With a grin, he pulls out the money and gives it to you. "Well worth the price."'
 			
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 20, 'sub'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -418,7 +408,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 	*clr
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/salon/sex/ira1.jpg"></center>'
-	'After the massage you send your latest client into the next room to get cleaned up and dressed. You notice one of the other girls coming over. She sits down in the chair next to you and pulls you over, she pulls down your top with out a word and starts sucking on your nipple. You are more than a bit shocked and just a bit turned on.'
+	'After the massage, you send your latest client into the next room to get cleaned up and dressed. You notice one of the other girls coming over. She sits down in the chair next to you and pulls you over, pulling down your top with out a word and starting to suck on your nipple. You are more than a bit shocked and just a bit turned on.'
 
 	act 'Tell her to stop':gt 'worksalon', 'start'
 
@@ -430,8 +420,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 		!gs 'telefon', 'AddContact', 'Axxx', 'icon_ira1', "$telsob = 'Alla' & gt 'telefon', 'mobilaraz'","hour >= 8 and hour <= 20","",""
 		alla += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/salon/sex/ira2.jpg"></center>'
-		'When you don''t object she gets up and pushes you down in the chair. Pulling your clothes off she exposes your pussy and pushes your legs apart. Dropping down to her hands and knees her face goes between your legs and her tongue darts out and starts licking you.'
-		'She is amazing what ever she is doing with her tongue is beyond description, you feel yourself orgasm with in moments. Within ten minutes you have had several rolling orgasms. Finally she licks you clean and gets up handing you a business card with a name Alla and number. With out a word she turns and walks away.'
+		'When you don''t object, she gets up and pushes you down in the chair. Pulling your clothes off, she exposes your pussy and pushes your legs apart. Dropping down to her hands and knees, her face goes between your legs, and her tongue darts out and starts licking you.'
+		'She is amazing, and whatever she is doing with her tongue is beyond description. You feel yourself orgasm within moments. Within ten minutes, you have had several rolling orgasms. Finally, she licks you clean and gets up, handing you a business card with the name Alla and a number. Without a word, she turns and walks away.'
 
 		$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 30, 'dom', 'lesbian'
@@ -444,9 +434,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/salon/sex/ira3.jpg"></center>'
-			'As she starts to walk away you grab her by the arm and pull her back, then you push her down in the chair. You pull her pants and panties off her and spread her legs. You start licking her pussy at once, doing your best to mimic what she did to you, but you know you are no where as skilled as she is.'
-			'Still after a few minutes the girl starts to moan, not long after her body spasms. Her pussy getting wetter as she cums, you lap up all her wetness.'
-			'Just before you finish you hear Pasha''s voice behind you. "What the fuck is this?" The girl jumps up and grabs her pants and runs out with out even stopping to put them on. You turn to look at Pasha starting down at your naked body. "We were..." Before you can even finish he interrupts you, he looks pissed.'
+			'As she starts to walk away, you grab her by the arm and pull her back, then you push her down in the chair. You pull her pants and panties off her and spread her legs. You start licking her pussy at once, doing your best to mimic what she did to you, but you know you are nowhere near as skilled as she is.'
+			'Still after a few minutes, the girl starts to moan, and not long after, her body spasms. Her pussy getting wetter as she cums, you lap up all her wetness.'
+			'Just before you finish, you hear Pasha''s voice behind you. "What the fuck is this?" The girl jumps up and grabs her pants and runs out with out even stopping to put them on. You turn to look at Pasha staring down at your naked body. He looks pissed. "We were..." Before you can even finish, he interrupts you.'
 			'"Leave your clothes here and get the fuck in my office and bend over my desk right now, before I fire your ass."'
 			
 			gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist'
@@ -467,7 +457,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/salon/sex/pashavag.jpg"></center>'
 		pcs_vag += 1
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A71'
-		'Bent over his desk waiting, you know what is about the happen and begin to rub your clit to make yourself wet. Moments later he walks in and takes off his pants. He walks right up behind you stroking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in his hand. He rubs the tip against your wet pussy a moment before pushing his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock balls deep into you. He begins to fuck your pussy hard, pounding into you, as you massage your clit. Slapping your ass hard he says. "Yeah you like this, don''t you slut, all you little whore''s just love being fucked hard and rough." He pounds himself into you for some time before he grunts and you feel his sperm shooing deep inside your pussy. He pulls out and starts putting his pants back on, noticing you still bent over his desk he says. "Get the fuck out of here and get back to work slut."'
+		'Bent over his desk waiting, you know what is about to happen and begin to rub your clit to make yourself wet. Moments later, he walks in and takes off his pants. He walks right up behind you stroking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in his hand. He rubs the tip against your wet pussy a moment before pushing his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock balls deep into you. He begins to fuck your pussy hard, pounding into you, as you massage your clit. Slapping your ass hard, he says, "Yeah you like this, don''t you slut? All you little whore''s just love being fucked hard and rough." He pounds himself into you for some time before he grunts and you feel his sperm shooting deep inside your pussy. He pulls out and starts putting his pants back on. Noticing you still bent over his desk, he says, "Get the fuck out of here and get back to work slut."'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 15, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -477,7 +467,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 		pcs_ass += 1
 		spafinloc = 3
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A71'
-		'Bent over his desk waiting, you know what is about the happen and begin to rub your clit to make yourself wet. Moments later he walks in and takes off his pants. He walks right up behind you stroking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in his hand. He rubs the tip against your asshole a moment before pushing his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your ass. You cry out in pain, you don''t think he is using any lube at all. He struggles for a bit before he can finally force himself balls deep into you. He begins to fuck your ass hard, pounding into you, as you massage your clit, trying to distract yourself from the pain. Slapping your ass hard he says. "Yeah you like this, don''t you slut, all you little whore''s just love being fucked hard and rough." He pounds himself into you for some time before he grunts and you feel his sperm shooing deep inside your ass. He pulls out and starts putting his pants back on, noticing you still bent over his desk he says. "Get the fuck out of here and get back to work slut."'
+		'Bent over his desk waiting, you know what is about the happen and begin to rub your clit to make yourself wet. Moments later he walks in and takes off his pants. He walks right up behind you stroking his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock in his hand. He rubs the tip against your asshole a moment before pushing his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock into your ass. You cry out in pain. You don''t think he is using any lube at all. He struggles for a bit before he can finally force himself balls deep into you. He begins to fuck your ass hard, pounding into you, as you massage your clit, trying to distract yourself from the pain. Slapping your ass hard he says, "Yeah you like this, don''t you slut? All you little whore''s just love being fucked hard and rough." He pounds himself into you for some time before he grunts and you feel his sperm shooting deep inside your ass. He pulls out and starts putting his pants back on. Noticing you still bent over his desk, he says, "Get the fuck out of here and get back to work slut."'
 	
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 15, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'

+ 2 - 2
locations/ybass.qsrc

@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ gs 'stat'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/suburb/mansion/ybass.jpg"></center>'
 
 if $clothingworntype ! 'nude': act 'Go to your house':minut += 5 & gt 'youplace'
-act 'Go into Gym': gt 'ysport'
+act 'Go into your gym': gt 'ysport'
 
 act 'Swim (1:00)':
 	cla
@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ act 'Swim (1:00)':
 	if pcs_stren < 40:stren_exp += 1
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/lake/swim.jpg"></center>'
-	'You swim in the pool, the water refreshes and invigorates.'
+	'You swim in the pool. The water refreshes and invigorates.'
 	if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the water.'
 
 	act 'Out of the water':gt 'ybass'

+ 11 - 20
locations/yesgorslut.qsrc

@@ -9,13 +9,7 @@ if pav_slut >= 250:
 
 		npc_rel['A<<numnpc>>'] += bonusotnG
 
-		if npc_gender['A<<numnpc>>'] = 0:
-			!!Guy
-			'You have a chat with <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, who happily listens to what you have to say.'
-		else
-			!!Girl
-			'You have a chat with <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, who happily listens to what you have to say.'
-		end
+		'You have a chat with <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, who happily listens to what you have to say.'
 	elseif npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 0:
 		!!no social group
 		if npc_gender['A<<numnpc>>'] = 0:
@@ -41,29 +35,26 @@ if pav_slut >= 250:
 			if kristinaSex = 0 and swinbeggor = 0:
 				'The moment you try to say something to <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, a grimace appears on her face and she says in a squeamish voice: "Ewwww! Go away <<$gnikname>>!"'
 			elseif kristinaSex = 0 and swinbeggor > 0:
-				'Christina looks at you full of hate: "I can''t believe you find time to run on Saturdays, aren''t you too busy whoring yourself out?"'
+				'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> looks at you full of hate: "I can''t believe you find time to run on Saturdays. Aren''t you too busy whoring yourself out?"'
 			elseif kristinaSex > 0:
-				'Christina smiles at you and says quietly: "You were not bad, the last time we entertained. You look so sexy with a cock down your throat!"'
+				'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> smiles at you and says quietly: "You were not bad the last time we entertained. You look so sexy with a cock down your throat!"'
 			end
 		elseif npc_gender['A<<numnpc>>'] = 0:
 			!!Guy
-			'You are trying to start a conversation with <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, but he immediately dismisses you: "I have no time for you <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m busy."'
+			'You try to start a conversation with <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, but he immediately dismisses you: "I have no time for you <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m busy."'
 		elseif npc_gender['A<<numnpc>>'] > 0 and numnpc ! 18:
 			!!Girl
 			'The moment you try to say something to <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, a grimace appears on her face and she says in a squeamish voice: "Ewwww! Go away <<$gnikname>>!"'
 		end
 	elseif npc_grupTipe['A<<numnpc>>'] = 1:
 		!!cool kid
-		if numnpc = 14:
-			!!Katja Meynold
-			'You have a nice chat with Katja. However, the topic keeps circling back to rumours of you and your reputation. Katja is concerned about the rumours of you being a <<$gnikname>>.'
-		elseif numnpc = 15:
-			!!Vicky
-			'You have a nice chat with Vicky. However, the topic keeps circling back to rumours of you and your reputation. Vicky is concerned about the rumours of you being a <<$gnikname>>.'
+		if numnpc = 14 or numnpc = 15:
+			!!Katja and Vicky Meynold
+			'You have a nice chat with <<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>. However, the topic keeps circling back to rumours of you and your reputation. <<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> is concerned about the rumours of you being a <<$gnikname>>.'
 		else
 			if npc_gender['A<<numnpc>>'] = 0:
 				!!Guy
-				'You are trying to start a conversation with <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> but he immediately dismisses you, making an effort of leafing through a calendar: "I have no time for you for you <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m busy. Maybe try again in two-thousand-and-never."'
+				'You try to start a conversation with <<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, but he immediately dismisses you, making an effort of leafing through a calendar: "I have no time for you <<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m busy. Maybe try again in two-thousand-and-never."'
 			else
 				!!Girl
 				if AlbinaQW['Friends'] >= 1 and numnpc = 23:
@@ -78,9 +69,9 @@ if pav_slut >= 250:
 		if npc_gender['A<<numnpc>>'] = 0:
 			!!Guy
 			if numnpc = 9:
-				!!Cats
-				'You try to talk with Vitek, but he immediately cuts you off: "I don''t talk to sluts, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Fuck off."'
-			elseif numnpc ! 9:
+				!!Vitek
+				'You try to talk with <<$npc_nickname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>>, but he immediately cuts you off: "I don''t talk to sluts, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Fuck off."'
+			else:
 				'<<$npc_firstname[''A<<numnpc>>'']>> laughs at you when you try to talk to him: "Haha, what''s wrong <<$gnikname>>? Looking for more cocks to suck?"'
 			end
 		else

+ 4 - 4
locations/youplace.qsrc

@@ -27,7 +27,7 @@ if banaMansion >= 1:'<a href="exec:gt ''yban''">Go to the sauna</a>.'
 if home_owned[5] = 3:'<a href="exec:gt ''ymans''">Walk inside the mansion</a>.'
 
 if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 1500000 and home_owned[5] = 0:
-	act 'Buy the land lot for a mansion (1,500,000)':
+	act 'Buy the land lot for a mansion (1,500,000 <b>₽</b>)':
 		cls
 		karta -= 1500000
 		home_owned[5] = 1
@@ -41,7 +41,7 @@ if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 1500000 and home_owned[5] = 0:
 end
 
 if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 500000 and home_owned[5] = 1:
-	act 'Pay for running utilies and the building foundation (500,000 <b>₽</b>)':
+	act 'Pay for running utilities and the building foundation (500,000 <b>₽</b>)':
 		cls
 		karta -= 500000
 		home_owned[5] = 2
@@ -173,7 +173,7 @@ if home_owned[5] = 3:
 			minut += 5
 			menu_off = 1
 			gs 'stat'
-			'The work on the batroom is finished.'
+			'The work on the bathroom is finished.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt $curloc
 		end
@@ -185,7 +185,7 @@ if home_owned[5] = 3:
 			minut += 5
 			menu_off = 1
 			gs 'stat'
-			'The work on the batroom is finished.'
+			'The work on the bathroom is finished.'
 
 			act 'Leave':gt $curloc
 		end

+ 22 - 22
locations/youry.qsrc

@@ -21,13 +21,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		if hour > 16:
-			'You ring the doorbell and it doesn''t take long for Yuri to open the door as he was expecting you, "Come in <<$pcs_firstname>> no need to be standing on the outside."'
+			'You ring the doorbell, and it doesn''t take long for Yuri to open the door as he was expecting you, "Come in <<$pcs_firstname>> no need to be standing outside."'
 
 			act 'Enter apartment':
 				cls
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You enter Yuri''s apartment, and follow him to the living room where you take a seat on the chair. Yuri quickly goes to the kitchen and brings back a bottle of champagne and two glasses.'
+				'You enter Yuri''s apartment and follow him to the living room where you take a seat on a chair. Yuri quickly goes to the kitchen and brings back a bottle of champagne and two glasses.'
 
 				act 'Have a drink with Yuri':
 					cls
@@ -40,8 +40,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					NoGuy = 1
 					gtGuy = 1
 					finance = 1
-					'You gladly accept as Yuri hands a glass of champagne over to you. As you take a sip of the champagne Yuri begins to praise your sex skills. You blush a little as he keeps complementing you.'
-					'As you finish the second glass of champagne Yuri suggests that you should continue on in the bedroom.'
+					'You gladly accept as Yuri hands a glass of champagne over to you. As you take a sip of the champagne, Yuri begins to praise your sex skills. You blush a little as he keeps complementing you.'
+					'As you finish the second glass of champagne, Yuri suggests that you should continue in the bedroom.'
 
 					act 'Accept':gt 'BDsex', 'start'
 				end
@@ -63,8 +63,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 	jouryQwNo = 0
 	minut += 30
 	gs 'stat'
-	'You and Yuri walk together to the metro. You get in the car and sit in silence under the trip to the industrial part of the city. Exiting the subway station, Yuri grabs hold of your hand and leads you in the direction of newly erected buildings, Yuri looks tense as he doesn''t say one word while you''re walking.' 
-	'Finally you come to a new nine-story building, Yuri opens the entrance door and you walk inside. Yuri moves over to the elevator and calls on it. It doesn''t take long before you arrive at his pad.'
+	'You and Yuri walk together to the metro. You get in the car and sit in silence for the length of the trip to the industrial part of the city. Exiting the subway station, Yuri grabs hold of your hand and leads you in the direction of some newly erected buildings. Yuri looks tense as he doesn''t say one word while you''re walking either.' 
+	'Finally you come to a new nine-story building. Yuri opens the entrance door, and you walk inside. Yuri moves over to the elevator and calls it. It doesn''t take long before you arrive at his pad.'
 
 	act 'Enter the apartment':
 		cla
@@ -72,7 +72,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 		minut += 30
 		gs 'drugs', 'alcohol', 'champagne'
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You enter a small cozy, one-bedroom apartment. It is surprisingly neat for a bachelor pad.'
+		'You enter a small, cozy one-bedroom apartment. It is surprisingly neat for a bachelor pad.'
 		'Yuri leads you into the hall and has you sit on a chair. He goes into the kitchen and brings back champagne with some cheese and puts it on the table between the two of you. He takes a seat in a nearby chair and turns on some music.'
 		'As Yuri struggles to come up with conversation topics, the attraction between you diminishes by the minute. Finally Yuri takes a deep breath and resolutely stands up and offers his hand to you, "Shall we dance?"'
 
@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You feeling a buzz after having a couple of glasses of champagne and gladly accept his invitation. You take his hand with a smile and Yuri, standing, moves a chair out into the middle of the room. Yuri walks up and embraces you, slowly moving his hips to the beat.' 
+			'You''re feeling a buzz after having a couple of glasses of champagne and gladly accept his invitation. You take his hand with a smile, and Yuri, standing, moves a chair out into the middle of the room. Yuri walks up and embraces you, slowly moving his hips to the beat.' 
 			'His hands gently glide over your body. As Yuri embraces you, he presses into you and you can clearly feel his rock hard cock through the fabric.'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
@@ -90,7 +90,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				gs 'stat'
-				'Without any hesitation you slide your hand all over his body, not stopping before reaching his crotch. You begin touching his errect cock through the fabric, Yuri stifles a sigh as he''s getting more excited.'
+				'Without any hesitation, you slide your hand all over his body, not stopping before reaching his crotch. You begin touching his erect cock through the fabric, Yuri stifles a sigh as he''s getting more excited.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -99,7 +99,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You unbutton his pants and slide your hand into his underwear grabbing hold of his errect cock, you quickly slide it out of his underwear exposing it in the open. The penis head is hidden under the foreskin, which fits snuggly around the head. You slide the skin on the penis back revealing its crimson, hard head.'
+					'You unbutton his pants and slide your hand into his underwear, grabbing hold of his erect cock. You quickly slide it out of his underwear, exposing it in the open. The penis head is hidden under the foreskin, which fits snuggly around the head. You slide the skin back, revealing its crimson, hard head.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -111,8 +111,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 						jourySex = 1
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/yuri/sex/bjdance.jpg"></center>'
-						'You tease Yuri''s cock a little further with your hands before squatting in front of him, grabbing it by the base and licking it. After a moment you cup his purple head with your <<$liptalk>> and start sucking his cock. Your lips slide up and down his rock hard cock.' 
-						'It doesn''t take long before Yuri is groaning loudly, looking down at you while you do your best to please him. All of a sudden he grabs hold of your head and says, "Let''s move on to the bedroom."'
+						'You tease Yuri''s cock a little further with your hands before squatting in front of him, grabbing it by the base and licking it. After a moment, you cup his purple head with your <<$liptalk>> and start sucking his cock. Your lips slide up and down his rock hard cock.' 
+						'It doesn''t take long before Yuri is groaning loudly, looking down at you while you do your best to please him. All of a sudden, he grabs hold of your head and says, "Let''s move to the bedroom."'
 						
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -127,8 +127,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/yuri/sex/sex.jpg"></center>'
 							'As soon as you enter the bedroom, Yuri quickly helps you undress and puts you on all fours, spreading your legs as he prepares to enter you.'
 							gs 'dinSex', 'wear_condom'
-							'He steps behind you, grabbing your hip with his one hand while he teases your wet clit with his erect cock...'
-							'As your wetness acts as lubricant, Yuri thrusts his cock inside of you. After a while he picks up his pace and by the end he''s fucking you so hard you that you''re barely able to hold on by the pleasure.'
+							'He steps behind you, grabbing your hip with his hand while he teases your wet clit with his erect cock...'
+							'With your wetness acting as lubricant, Yuri thrusts his cock inside of you. After a while, he picks up his pace, and by the end, he''s fucking you so hard you''re barely able to hold on against the pleasure.'
 							
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -139,22 +139,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 								pose = 1
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/yuri/sex/sex1.jpg"></center>'
-								'By now you''re loudly moaning but Yuri is not paying attention to you, as he continues to plow his cock into you.'
-								'He furiously kisses your body and you moan under him, feeling his cock ram your insides, pushing deeper with his every move.'
+								'By now you''re loudly moaning, and Yuri does not let up, continuing to plow his cock into you.'
+								'He furiously kisses your body, and you moan under him, feeling his cock ram your insides, pushing deeper with his every move.'
 								
 								gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub'
 								gs 'stat'
 								
 								gs 'dinsex','sexcum'
-								'Yuri pulls out and finishes on you, kissing you on the cheek and then heads over to the bathroom.'
+								'Finally, Yuri pulls out and finishes on you. He then kisses you on the cheek and heads over to the bathroom.'
 
 								act 'Go to the bathroom':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/yuri/sex/van.jpg"></center>'
-									'Shortly thereafter you follow him into the bathroom. You see that he''s taking a bath, and he invites to join him. You nod as you wearily climbing into the shower.'
-									'Yuri begins to lather you and you feel his soft member rubbing against your hip begin to harden, as it rises.'
+									'Shortly thereafter, you follow him into the bathroom. You see that he''s taking a bath, and he invites you to join him. You nod as you wearily climb in.'
+									'Yuri begins to lather you, and you feel his soft member rubbing against your hip begin to harden once again.'
 									if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the shower.'
 
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
@@ -165,7 +165,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 										*clr
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/yuri/sex/shower.jpg"></center>'
-										'Yuri embraces you and the two of you begin making out. You''re already feeling fatigued, but the situation excites you and you respond by caressing Yuri as well, feeling his body.'
+										'Yuri embraces you, and the two of you begin making out. You''re already feeling fatigued, but the situation excites you, and you respond by caressing Yuri as well, feeling his body.'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -175,7 +175,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 											*clr
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/yuri/sex/shower1.jpg"></center>'
-											'Yuri grabs you by the shoulders and forces you to hunch as he sticks his still limp cock in your mouth. You start to suck his cock, which gets harder thanks to your mouth skills. It doesn''t take long before his cock is hard as steel and he begins to groan. A few moments later he takes his member out of your mouth as he prepares to cum.'
+											'Yuri grabs you by the shoulders and forces you to hunch as he sticks his still somewhat limp cock in your mouth. You start to suck his cock, which gets harder thanks to your mouth skills. It doesn''t take long before his cock is hard as steel and he begins to groan. A few moments later, he takes his member out of your mouth as he prepares to cum.'
 											
 											gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 											gs 'stat'
@@ -189,7 +189,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quest':
 												facial += 1
 												gs 'stat'
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/yuri/sex/shower2.jpg"></center>'
-												'Yuri cums violently as his hot cum slaps you in the face, there isn''t much cum covering your face as Yuri already spent most his load before.'
+												'Yuri cums violently, his hot blasts slapping you in the face, though there aren''t that many of them as Yuri already spent most of his load before.'
 
 												act 'Take a shower':
 													cla