Merge remote-tracking branch 'Spackled_Lanturn/minor-fixes'

locations/bordel.qsrc

@@ -53,22 +53,31 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brothel':
 		end
 	end
 
-	if func('bordel', 'is_open'):
-		act 'Go to the reception room and wait for customers':
-
-			if (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) or cumloc[11] = 1 or pcs_makeup < 2 or pcs_leghair > 3 or pcs_pubes > 3 or sweat > 25 or pcs_hairbsh = 0:
-				cla
-				'The brothel madam comes over to you and says, "Our customers expect you to be clean, shaven, made-up and with your hair looking nice. Go and sort yourself out, now!"'
-
-				act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'bordel', 'dysh'
-			elseif $clothingworntype ! 'fancy_burlesque' and PCloStyle ! 4 and $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
-				cla
-				'You need to wear an outfit that can be used for prostitution. If you haven''t got anything suitable and you are desperate, you could work naked, but you will get paid less and might get treated badly.'
-				'You can change your clothes in the bathroom.'
-
-				act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'bordel', 'dysh'
-			else
-				gt 'bordel', 'var'
+	if func('bordel', 'is_open') = 0:
+		'The brothel is closed for the night however, so you won''t be able to work now regardless.'
+	else
+		if borsexkol >= 2:
+			!! borsexkol is reset in cikl, meaning that it is reset at midnight, not when the brothel
+			!! opens or closes. if this is not desired behavior, will need to handle resetting this var
+			!! in brothel specific code.
+			'You have already hit this limit, so you won''t be able to work again until midnight.'
+		else
+			act 'Go to the reception room and wait for customers':
+
+				if (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) or cumloc[11] = 1 or pcs_makeup < 2 or pcs_leghair > 3 or pcs_pubes > 3 or sweat > 25 or pcs_hairbsh = 0:
+					cla
+					'The brothel madam comes over to you and says, "Our customers expect you to be clean, shaven, made-up and with your hair looking nice. Go and sort yourself out, now!"'
+
+					act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'bordel', 'dysh'
+				elseif $clothingworntype ! 'fancy_burlesque' and PCloStyle ! 4 and $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
+					cla
+					'You need to wear an outfit that can be used for prostitution. If you haven''t got anything suitable and you are desperate, you could work naked, but you will get paid less and might get treated badly.'
+					'You can change your clothes in the bathroom.'
+
+					act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'bordel', 'dysh'
+				else
+					gt 'bordel', 'var'
+				end
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -112,7 +121,6 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
     $location_type = 'event'
 	menu_off = 1
-	if borsexkol >= 2:gt 'bordel', 'brothel'
 	if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 		bordelpay = 8
 	else
@@ -121,6 +129,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'Client', rand(18,40)
 	gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 	minut += 30
+	gs 'stat'
 	borrand = rand(0, 10)
 
 	if borrand = 0:
@@ -276,11 +285,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
 			gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated,'2'
 			gt 'paysex', 'start'
 		end
-	elseif borrand > 4:
-		'You are not chosen.'
-
+	else
 		act 'Go to your room':gt 'bordel', 'brothel'
-		act 'Wait for another':gt 'bordel', 'var'
+		if func('bordel', 'is_open'):
+			'You are not chosen.'
+			act 'Wait for another':gt 'bordel', 'var'
+		else
+			'You are not chosen, and the brothel is now closed.'
+		end
+	end
+
+	if borrand <= 4 and func('bordel', 'is_open') = 0:
+		'The brothel is closing now, so this is your last chance to work today.'
 	end
 end
 

locations/bouling.qsrc

@@ -49,7 +49,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start' or $ARGS[0] = '':
 				end
 			elseif boulrand = 1:
 				killvar 'boulrand'
-				'You meet two girls and they suggest challenging two guys to a game: Prize 5000 <b>₽</b>, lose and they have sex with you.'
+				'You meet two girls, and they suggest challenging two guys to a game: Prize 5000 <b>₽</b>, lose and they have sex with you.'
 				act 'Play':boulvar = 2 & gt 'bouling', 'randwin'
 				gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'hard'
 				if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -86,22 +86,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'randwin':
 
 	if boulwin > 10 and boulvar = 0:
 		money += 300
-		'You won and received 300 <b>₽</b>.'
+		'You win and receive 300 <b>₽</b>.'
 
 		act 'Leave': gt 'bouling'
 	elseif boulwin > 10 and boulvar = 1:
 		money += 2000
-		'You won and received 2,000 <b>₽</b>.'
+		'You win and receive 2,000 <b>₽</b>.'
 
 		act 'Leave': gt 'bouling'
 	elseif boulwin > 10 and boulvar = 2:
 		money += 5000
-		'You won and received 5,000 <b>₽</b>.'
+		'You win and receive 5,000 <b>₽</b>.'
 
 		act 'Leave': gt 'bouling'
 	elseif boulwin <= 10 and boulvar = 0:
 		money -= 300
-		'You lost and paid 300 <b>₽</b>.'
+		'You lose and pay 300 <b>₽</b>.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'bouling'
 	elseif boulwin <= 10 and boulvar = 1:
 		picrand = 14
@@ -122,7 +122,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'randwin':
 			end
 			act 'Pay': money -= 2000 & gt 'bouling'
 		else
-			'You lost, but you do not have money to pay, only one thing for it.'
+			'You lose, but you do not have enough money to pay. Only one thing for it.'
 
 			act 'Offer sex instead':xgt 'sexdvoe', 'var'
 		end

locations/sex.qsrc

@@ -49,10 +49,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'minet':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexrand/minet<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-	if textrand = 1:'You take his member in your hand and pull his foreskin back, exposing the shiny head underneath. Giving him a sweet smile, you close your lips around it and run your tongue over the tip. You then continue to suck his cock vigorously, teasing him with your tongue and fondling his balls with your fingers. He moans blissfully while you service him with your mouth, not taking his eyes from you.'
-	if textrand = 2:'You kneel down and place your hand in on his nearly fully erect trunk. You smile at him shyly and mutter: "That''s a nice cock you have there..." before closing your lips around the tip and sucking him off.'
-	if textrand = 3:'You dart your tongue all over his shaft, licking him eagerly all the way from the tip of his cock, to and including his testicles. Then your tender lips close around the well-engorged head, and you slowly take more and more of his length down your throat while you stroke the rest of his shaft that doesn''t fit in your mouth with your hand.'
-	if textrand = 4:'You wrap your delicate fingers around his hard cock and guide it to your mouth, closing your lips around the tip. You try to take as much of his length down your throat as you can, gently caressing your own clit while you service him with your mouth.'
+	if textrand = 1:'You take his member in your hand and pull his foreskin back, exposing the shiny head underneath. Giving him a sweet smile, you close your lips around it and run your tongue over the tip. You then continue to suck his cock vigorously, teasing him with your tongue and fondling his balls with your fingers. He moans blissfully while you service him with your mouth, not taking his eyes off you.'
+	if textrand = 2:'You kneel down and place your hand on his nearly fully erect trunk. You smile at him shyly and mutter, "That''s a nice cock you have there..." before closing your lips around the tip and sucking him off.'
+	if textrand = 3:'You dart your tongue all over his shaft, licking him eagerly all the way from the tip of his cock to and including his testicles. Then your tender lips close around the well-engorged head, and you slowly take more and more of his length down your throat while you stroke the rest of his shaft that doesn''t fit in your mouth with your hand.'
+	if textrand = 4:'You wrap your delicate fingers around his hard cock and guide it to your mouth, closing your lips around the tip. You try to take as much of his length down your throat as you can, gently caressing your own clit while you service him.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -76,9 +76,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kuni':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexrand/kuni<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 
 	if textrand = 1:'He places gentle kisses and licks all across your thighs, slowly working his way to your sweet slit. When he reaches it, he eagerly thrusts his tongue inside you as far it will go, lapping up your juices enthusiastically.'
-	if textrand = 2:'He immediately thrusts his tongue deep inside your pussy, and moves it around as much as he can. He''s completely ignoring your clitoris though, and the devious glint in his eyes makes you believe he''s doing that on purpose. You enthusiastically rub your groin against his face, in an attempt to get yourself off.'
+	if textrand = 2:'He immediately thrusts his tongue deep inside your pussy and moves it around as much as he can. He''s completely ignoring your clitoris though, and the devious glint in his eyes makes you believe he''s doing that on purpose. You enthusiastically rub your groin against his face in an attempt to get yourself off.'
 	if textrand = 3:'With his nose against your clitoris and his tongue plunged deep inside you, he licks you enthusiastically. Then he moves away from you and guides your ass to his mouth, eagerly licking your sphincter and trying to squeeze his tongue in. It feels heavenly, and you moan loudly while you thrust your hips against his face, encouraging him to go on.'
-	if textrand = 4:'His tongue gently begins to lick your pussy lips. "Oh my!" you think to yourself, enjoying his touch more and more. When he pays more attention to your clitoris you have to pull away from him for a moment... wow, that''s intense!'
+	if textrand = 4:'His tongue gently begins to lick your pussy lips. "Oh my!" you think to yourself, enjoying his touch more and more. When he pays more attention to your clitoris, you have to pull away from him for a moment... wow, that''s intense!'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -104,10 +104,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vag':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexrand/vag<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	if textrand = 1:'He slowly penetrates you, and keeps thrusting until most of his length is buried inside you. You eagerly kiss him when you see the look of ecstacy on his face, and wrap your arms around him while he thrusts his hips against yours.'
-	if textrand = 2:'His hard cock slides inside your wet cunt easily, and you feel the engorged head of his cock slowly part your insides when it goes deeper and deeper. You can''t help but rub your clit, while you encourage him to fuck you harder.'
-	if textrand = 3:'He doesn''t stop until his cock bottoms out in you, and then proceeds to fuck you with the entire length of his impressive shaft. His thrusts become more and more intense, and soon the sound of his skin slapping against yours fills the room.'
-	if textrand = 4:'Your wet pussy eagerly takes his cock in, and you hear some embarrassing sopping sounds when he proceeds to fuck your pussy enthusiastically. You must''ve wanted him pretty badly, if you got this wet...'
+	if textrand = 1:'He slowly penetrates you and keeps thrusting until most of his length is buried inside you. You eagerly kiss him when you see the look of ecstasy on his face and wrap your arms around him while he thrusts his hips against yours.'
+	if textrand = 2:'His hard cock slides inside your wet cunt easily, and you feel the engorged head slowly part your insides when it goes deeper and deeper. You can''t help but rub your clit, while you encourage him to fuck you harder.'
+	if textrand = 3:'He doesn''t stop until his cock bottoms out in you and then proceeds to fuck you with the entire length of his impressive shaft. His thrusts become more and more intense, and soon, the sound of his skin slapping against yours fills the room.'
+	if textrand = 4:'Your wet pussy eagerly takes his cock in, and you hear some embarrassing sopping sounds when he proceeds to fuck your pussy enthusiastically. You must''ve wanted him pretty badly if you got this wet...'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -133,10 +133,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'nae':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexrand/nae<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-	if textrand = 1:'He slowly penetrates you, and keeps thrusting until most of his length is buried inside you. You eagerly kiss him when you see the look of ecstacy on his face, and wrap your arms around him while he thrusts his hips against yours.'
-	if textrand = 2:'His hard cock slides inside your wet cunt easily, and you feel the engorged head of his cock slowly part your insides when it goes deeper and deeper. You can''t help but rub your clit, while you encourage him to fuck you harder.'
-	if textrand = 3:'He doesn''t stop until his cock bottoms out in you, and then proceeds to fuck you with the entire length of his impressive shaft. His thrusts become more and more intense, and soon the sound of his skin slapping against yours fills the room.'
-	if textrand = 4:'Your wet pussy eagerly takes his cock in, and you hear some embarrassing sopping sounds when he proceeds to fuck your pussy enthusiastically. You must''ve wanted him pretty badly, if you got this wet...'
+	if textrand = 1:'He slowly penetrates you and keeps thrusting until most of his length is buried inside you. You eagerly kiss him when you see the look of ecstasy on his face and wrap your arms around him while he thrusts his hips against yours.'
+	if textrand = 2:'His hard cock slides inside your wet cunt easily, and you feel the engorged head slowly part your insides when it goes deeper and deeper. You can''t help but rub your clit, while you encourage him to fuck you harder.'
+	if textrand = 3:'He doesn''t stop until his cock bottoms out in you and then proceeds to fuck you with the entire length of his impressive shaft. His thrusts become more and more intense, and soon, the sound of his skin slapping against yours fills the room.'
+	if textrand = 4:'Your wet pussy eagerly takes his cock in, and you hear some embarrassing sopping sounds when he proceeds to fuck your pussy enthusiastically. You must''ve wanted him pretty badly if you got this wet...'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -161,10 +161,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rak':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexrand/rak<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-	if textrand = 1:'He slowly penetrates you, and keeps thrusting until most of his length is buried inside you. You eagerly kiss him when you see the look of ecstacy on his face, and wrap your arms around him while he thrusts his hips against yours.'
-	if textrand = 2:'His hard cock slides inside your wet cunt easily, and you feel the engorged head of his cock slowly part your insides when it goes deeper and deeper. You can''t help but rub your clit, while you encourage him to fuck you harder.'
-	if textrand = 3:'He doesn''t stop until his cock bottoms out in you, and then proceeds to fuck you with the entire length of his impressive shaft. His thrusts become more and more intense, and soon the sound of his skin slapping against yours fills the room.'
-	if textrand = 4:'Your wet pussy eagerly takes his cock in, and you hear some embarrassing sopping sounds when he proceeds to fuck your pussy enthusiastically. You must''ve wanted him pretty badly, if you got this wet...'
+	if textrand = 1:'He slowly penetrates you and keeps thrusting until most of his length is buried inside you. You eagerly kiss him when you see the look of ecstasy on his face and wrap your arms around him while he thrusts his hips against yours.'
+	if textrand = 2:'His hard cock slides inside your wet cunt easily, and you feel the engorged head slowly part your insides when it goes deeper and deeper. You can''t help but rub your clit, while you encourage him to fuck you harder.'
+	if textrand = 3:'He doesn''t stop until his cock bottoms out in you and then proceeds to fuck you with the entire length of his impressive shaft. His thrusts become more and more intense, and soon, the sound of his skin slapping against yours fills the room.'
+	if textrand = 4:'Your wet pussy eagerly takes his cock in, and you hear some embarrassing sopping sounds when he proceeds to fuck your pussy enthusiastically. You must''ve wanted him pretty badly if you got this wet...'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -190,10 +190,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bok':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexrand/bok<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	if textrand = 1:'He slowly penetrates you, and keeps thrusting until most of his length is buried inside you. You eagerly kiss him when you see the look of ecstacy on his face, and wrap your arms around him while he thrusts his hips against yours.'
-	if textrand = 2:'His hard cock slides inside your wet cunt easily, and you feel the engorged head of his cock slowly part your insides when it goes deeper and deeper. You can''t help but rub your clit, while you encourage him to fuck you harder.'
-	if textrand = 3:'He doesn''t stop until his cock bottoms out in you, and then proceeds to fuck you with the entire length of his impressive shaft. His thrusts become more and more intense, and soon the sound of his skin slapping against yours fills the room.'
-	if textrand = 4:'Your wet pussy eagerly takes his cock in, and you hear some embarrassing sopping sounds when he proceeds to fuck your pussy enthusiastically. You must''ve wanted him pretty badly, if you got this wet...'
+	if textrand = 1:'He slowly penetrates you and keeps thrusting until most of his length is buried inside you. You eagerly kiss him when you see the look of ecstasy on his face and wrap your arms around him while he thrusts his hips against yours.'
+	if textrand = 2:'His hard cock slides inside your wet cunt easily, and you feel the engorged head slowly part your insides when it goes deeper and deeper. You can''t help but rub your clit, while you encourage him to fuck you harder.'
+	if textrand = 3:'He doesn''t stop until his cock bottoms out in you and then proceeds to fuck you with the entire length of his impressive shaft. His thrusts become more and more intense, and soon, the sound of his skin slapping against yours fills the room.'
+	if textrand = 4:'Your wet pussy eagerly takes his cock in, and you hear some embarrassing sopping sounds when he proceeds to fuck your pussy enthusiastically. You must''ve wanted him pretty badly if you got this wet...'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -220,10 +220,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexrand/anal<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 
-	if textrand = 1:'You spread your buttocks invitingly, inviting the man to fuck your ass. He does not hesitate and guides his cock to your puckered sphincter, slowly penetrating you further and further with each thrust. He''s a bit rough about it, making you squeal loudly with every thrust.'
-	if textrand = 2:'His cock slowly but surely finds its way into your ass. After a while he bottoms out in you, and you squeeze your ass around the base of his cock testily. The tightness of your sphincter around him makes his cock pulse even harder, and he groans: "Oh yea! Keep doing that! That feels great... don''t stop!"'
-	if textrand = 3:'You feel something thick and hard press against your sphincter, and enter it. You cry out in pain but he pays no attention to you, and begins to fuck you enthusiastically. Slowly your whimpers of pain become moans of pleasure, and despite the pain you greatly enjoy him fucking your ass.'
-	if textrand = 4:'You spread your buttocks invitingly, inviting the man to fuck your ass. He does not hesitate and guides his cock to your puckered sphincter, slowly penetrating you further and further with each thrust. He''s a bit rough about it, making you squeal loudly with every thrust.'
+	if textrand = 1:'You spread your buttocks enticingly, inviting the man to fuck your ass. He does not hesitate and guides his cock to your puckered sphincter, slowly penetrating you further and further. He''s a bit rough about it, making you squeal loudly with every thrust.'
+	if textrand = 2:'His cock slowly but surely finds its way into your ass. After a while, he bottoms out in you, and you squeeze your ass around the base of his cock testily. The tightness of your sphincter around him makes his cock pulse even harder, and he groans, "Oh yea! Keep doing that! That feels great... don''t stop!"'
+	if textrand = 3:'You feel something thick and hard press against your sphincter and enter it. You cry out in pain, but he pays no attention to you and begins to fuck you enthusiastically. Slowly, your whimpers become moans of pleasure, and despite the pain, you greatly enjoy him fucking your ass.'
+	if textrand = 4:'You spread your buttocks enticingly, inviting the man to fuck your ass. He does not hesitate and guides his cock to your puckered sphincter, slowly penetrating you further and further. He''s a bit rough about it, making you squeal loudly with every thrust.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10
 	gs 'stat'

locations/sexdvanadva.qsrc

@@ -14,143 +14,74 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
+	cla
+	*clr
+	sexvar += 1
+
 	sexdvarand = rand(0, 6)
 
 	if picrand = 11:sexdvarand = rand(0, 5)
 	if picrand = 14:sexdvarand = rand(0, 4)
 
 	if sexdvarand = 0:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
-
-		if dvdvsxbj = 0:
-			dvdvsxbj = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvanadva/minet<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		'The two of you suck their cocks.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub'
-		gs 'stat'
-
-		if sexvar < 3:act 'More':xgt 'sexdvanadva', 'var'
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Finish':gt 'sexdvanadva', 'end'
 	elseif sexdvarand = 1:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvanadva/vag<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		'While she enjoys a stiff cock in her pussy, you are not left wanting for attention.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 10, 'sub'
-		gs 'stat'
-
-		if sexvar < 3:act 'More':xgt 'sexdvanadva', 'var'
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Finish':gt 'sexdvanadva', 'end'
 	elseif sexdvarand = 2:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
-
-		if dvdvsxsex = 0:
-			dvdvsxsex = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvanadva/uvag<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		'He thrusts into you. His cock sends waves of pleasure over your body.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub'
-		gs 'stat'
-
-		if sexvar < 3:act 'More':xgt 'sexdvanadva', 'var'
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Finish':gt 'sexdvanadva', 'end'
 	elseif sexdvarand = 3:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvanadva/anal<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		'You enjoy the sight of a cock in her ass, but you are mostly too distracted by the cock in your mouth.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub'
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		if sexvar < 3:act 'More':xgt 'sexdvanadva', 'var'
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Finish':gt 'sexdvanadva', 'end'
 	elseif sexdvarand = 4:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
-
-		if dvdvsxanal = 0:
-			dvdvsxanal = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvanadva/uanal<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'When he enters your backdoor it hurts a little, but soon the pain goes away. Pleasure takes its place, as he slowly moves back and forth, stretching your hole.'
+		'When he enters your backdoor, it hurts a little, but soon, the pain goes away. Pleasure takes its place, as he slowly moves back and forth, stretching your hole.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		if sexvar < 3:act 'More':xgt 'sexdvanadva', 'var'
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Finish':gt 'sexdvanadva', 'end'
 	elseif sexdvarand = 5:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
-
-		if dvdvsxsex = 0:
-			dvdvsxsex = 1
-		end
-
-		if dvdvsxanal = 0:
-			dvdvsxanal = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvanadva/udp<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		'Both men enter you at the same time. The feeling is almost too intense. Your moans of pleasure urge them on.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 		minut -= 10
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		if sexvar < 3:act 'More':xgt 'sexdvanadva', 'var'
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Finish':gt 'sexdvanadva', 'end'
 	elseif sexdvarand = 6:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvanadva/dp<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'She has both men fucking her. It makes you feel a little envious, as you watch playing with yourself.'
+		'She has both men fucking her. It makes you feel a little envious as you watch, playing with yourself.'
 		
 		gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 10, 'sub'
-		gs 'stat'
-
-		if sexvar < 3:act 'More':xgt 'sexdvanadva', 'var'
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Finish':gt 'sexdvanadva', 'end'
 	end
+
+	gs 'stat'
+	if sexvar < 3:act 'More':xgt 'sexdvanadva', 'var'
+	if sexvar >= 3:act 'Finish':gt 'sexdvanadva', 'end'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	cla
 	*clr
 	minut += 10
-	dvdvsxbj = 0
-	dvdvsxsex = 0
-	dvdvsxanal = 0
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'Random Guy', rand(18,45)
 	gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 	spafinloc = 12
 	gs 'cum_manage'
-	sexvar = 0
+	killvar 'sexvar'
+	killvar 'sexdvarand'
 
-	if pcs_horny >= 80:
-		$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-	end
+	if pcs_horny >= 80:$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvanadva/cum<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'They spill semen all over both of you. You lick it of each other, and share a deep kiss, before you both swallow.'
+	'They spill semen all over both of you. You lick it off each other and share a deep kiss before you both swallow.'
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'

locations/sexdvoe.qsrc

@@ -60,22 +60,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
 	sexstart = 1
 	sexvar = rand(3,6)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvoe/kiss.jpg"></center>'
-	'After some kissing it is time to move on to the next stage.'
+	'After some kissing, it is time to move on to the next stage.'
 	xgt 'sexdvoe', 'menu'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
+	*clr
+	sexvar -= 1
+	gs 'dinsex2', 'stamina_npc'
 
 	!blowjob
 	if sexdvoeloc = 0:
-		*clr
-		sexvar -= 1
-		gs 'dinsex2', 'stamina_npc'
-
-		if dvsxbj = 0:
-			dvsxbj = 1
-		end
-		
 		if sexvar > 0:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvoe/minet<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		else 
@@ -86,28 +81,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		
-		if pcs_horny >= 80:
-			$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'You have an orgasm.'
-		end
-		if sexvar = 1:'<br>They indicate that they will cum soon.'
-		if sexvar > 0:xgt 'sexdvoe', 'menu'
-		if sexvar = 0:gs 'sexdvoe', 'end'
-		
 	!double penetration
 	elseif sexdvoeloc < 3:
-		*clr
-		sexvar -= 1
-		gs 'dinsex2', 'stamina_npc'
-
-		if dvsxsex = 0:
-			dvsxsex = 1
-		end
-
-		if dvsxanal = 0:
-			dvsxanal = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvoe/dp<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'Both of them fuck you, one of them your ass, the other your pussy. The double friction gives you great pleasure as they are pumping in and out of your body in tandem.'
@@ -140,29 +115,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 			cumprecheck = 1
 			if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[1]
 		end
-
-		if pcs_horny >= 80:
-			$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'You have an orgasm.'
-		end
-		if sexvar = 1:'<br>They indicate that they will cum soon.'
-		if sexvar > 0:xgt 'sexdvoe', 'menu'
-		if sexvar = 0:gs 'sexdvoe', 'end'
 			
 	!spitroast, pussy
 	elseif sexdvoeloc < 5:
-		*clr
-		sexvar -= 1
-		gs 'dinsex2', 'stamina_npc'
-
-		if dvsxbj = 0:
-			dvsxbj = 1
-		end
-
-		if dvsxsex = 0:
-			dvsxsex = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvoe/vag<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'While one guy is fucking your pussy, you diligently suck off the second.'
@@ -195,30 +150,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 			cumprecheck = 1
 			if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[1]
 		end
-
-		if pcs_horny >= 80:
-			$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'You have an orgasm.'
-			
-		end
-		if sexvar = 1:'<br>They indicate that they will cum soon.'
-		if sexvar > 0:xgt 'sexdvoe', 'menu'
-		if sexvar = 0:gs 'sexdvoe', 'end'
 		
 	!spitroast, ass
 	else
-		*clr
-		sexvar -= 1
-		gs 'dinsex2', 'stamina_npc'
-
-		if dvsxbj = 0:
-			dvsxbj = 1
-		end
-
-		if dvsxanal = 0:
-			dvsxanal = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/sexdvoe/anal<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'While one guy is fucking your ass, you diligently suck off the second.'
@@ -226,46 +160,40 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 			gs 'boyStat', $boy[1]
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub'
-			minut -= 10
-			gs 'stat'
 		elseif sexdvoeloc = 3:
 			'While <<$boydesc[0]>> is fucking your ass, you diligently suck off <<$boydesc[1]>>.'
 			gs 'boyStat', $boy[0]
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 			gs 'boyStat', $boy[1]
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub'
-			minut -= 10
-			gs 'stat'
 		else
 			'While <<$boydesc[1]>> is fucking your ass, you diligently suck off <<$boydesc[0]>>.'
 			gs 'boyStat', $boy[1]
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub'
 			gs 'boyStat', $boy[0]
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub'
-			minut -= 10
-			gs 'stat'
 		end
 
-		if pcs_horny >= 80:
-			$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'You have an orgasm.'
-		end
-		if sexvar = 1:'<br>They indicate that they will cum soon.'
-		if sexvar > 0:xgt 'sexdvoe', 'menu'
-		if sexvar = 0:gs 'sexdvoe', 'end'
+		minut -= 10
+		gs 'stat'
+	end
+
+	if pcs_horny >= 80:
+		$orgasm_or = 'custom'
+		$orgasm_txt = 'You have an orgasm.'
 	end
+	if sexvar = 1:'<br>They indicate that they will cum soon.'
+	if sexvar > 0:xgt 'sexdvoe', 'menu'
+	if sexvar = 0:gs 'sexdvoe', 'end'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	cla
 	gs 'sweat', 'add', 10
 	minut += 10
-	dvsxbj = 0
-	dvsxsex = 0
-	dvsxanal = 0
-	sexvar = 0
-	sameboy = 0
-	sexstart = 0
+	killvar 'sexvar'
+	killvar 'sameboy'
+	killvar 'sexstart'
 	if sexdvoeloc = 0:
 		temp = rand(0,5)
 		if temp = 0:
@@ -283,114 +211,65 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 		else 
 			if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[1]
 		end
-		'With a groan they both cum, mostly in your mouth, but it may have gotten on your face too.'
-		
-		gs 'arousal', 'end'
-		gs 'stat'
-		
+		'With a groan, they both cum, mostly in your mouth, but some may have gotten on your face too.'
 	elseif sexdvoeloc = 1:
 		if $knownboy[0] = 1:gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[0], 1 else gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[0]
 		if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'anus', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'anus', $boy[1]
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'They groan, and you feel the copious amount of their seed they both pump inside your body at the same time.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		else
-			'They both groan, and you feel as <<$boydesc[0]>> pump your pussy full of his seed, while <<$boydesc[1]>>''s semen is released in your ass.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
+			'They both groan, and you feel <<$boydesc[0]>> pump your pussy full of his seed, while <<$boydesc[1]>>''s semen is released in your ass.'
 		end
 	elseif sexdvoeloc = 2:
 		if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[1]
 		if $knownboy[0] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'anus', $boy[0], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'anus', $boy[0]
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'They groan, and you feel the copious amount of their seed they both pump inside your body at the same time.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		else
-			'They both groan, and you feel as <<$boydesc[1]>> pump your pussy full of his seed, while <<$boydesc[0]>>''s semen is released in your ass.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
+			'They both groan, and you feel <<$boydesc[1]>> pump your pussy full of his seed, while <<$boydesc[0]>>''s semen is released in your ass.'
 		end
 	elseif sexdvoeloc = 3:
 		if $knownboy[0] = 1:gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[0], 1 else gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[0]
 		if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[1]
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'They groan, and you have to swallow one of the <<$boydesc[0]>>''s seed while the other pumps your pussy full of his own.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		else
 			'They both groan, and you have to swallow <<$boydesc[1]>>''s seed while <<$boydesc[0]>> pumps your pussy full of his own.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		end
 	elseif sexdvoeloc = 4:
 		if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', '', $boy[1]
 		if $knownboy[0] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[0], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[0]
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'They groan, and you have to swallow one of the <<$boydesc[0]>>''s seed while the other pumps your pussy full of his own.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		else
 			'They both groan, and you have to swallow <<$boydesc[0]>>''s seed while <<$boydesc[1]>> pumps your pussy full of his own.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		end
 	elseif sexdvoeloc = 5:
 		if $knownboy[0] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'anus', $boy[0], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'anus', $boy[0]
 		if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[1]
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'They groan at the same time, and you feel the taste of one of the guys as he cums inside your mouth, while the other one pumps your ass full of his own semen.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		else
 			'They groan at the same time, and you feel the taste of <<$boydesc[1]>>''s seed as he cums inside your mouth, while <<$boydesc[0]>> pumps your ass full of his semen.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		end
 	else
 		if $knownboy[1] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'anus', $boy[1], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'anus', $boy[1]
 		if $knownboy[0] = 1:gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[0], 1 else gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy[0]
 		if sameboy = 1:
 			'They groan at the same time, and you feel the taste of one of the guys as he cums inside your mouth, while the other one pumps your ass full of his own semen.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
 		else
-			'They groan at the same time, and you feel the taste of <<$boydesc[0]>>''s seed as he cums inside your mouth, while <<$boydesc[1]>> pumps your ass full of his semen.'
-			
-			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-			gs 'stat'
-			
+			'They groan at the same time, and you feel the taste of <<$boydesc[0]>>''s seed as he cums inside your mouth, while <<$boydesc[1]>> pumps your ass full of his semen.'	
 		end
 	end
 
-	if pcs_horny >= 80:
-		$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-	end
+	killvar 'sexdvoeloc'
+
+	gs 'arousal', 'end'
+	gs 'stat'
+	
+	if pcs_horny >= 80:$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 
-	if picrand = 29:'When it ends boss says that you did well and today you are free and can go.'
+	if picrand = 29:'When it ends, boss says that you did well and today you are free and can go.'
 	if picrand = 39:'Then <<$boydescA>> throws you out of the apartment.'
 	killvar 'knownboy'
 	killvar 'knwn'

locations/sexm.qsrc

@@ -22,7 +22,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you on the lips, while his hand squeezes your ass.'
 				elseif loverdays[lover_number] >= 3:
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 2
-					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you on the lips and then pulls away mumbling irritably: "Not much happening, so far."'
+					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you on the lips and then pulls away mumbling irritably, "Not much happening, so far."'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
 				if loverdays[lover_number] < 10:
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you goodbye on the lips, hugging your waist.'
 				elseif loverdays[lover_number] >= 10:
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 2
-					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you goodbye on the lips and asks: "Maybe it''s time we took things to the next level?"'
+					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you goodbye on the lips and asks, "Maybe it''s time we took things to the next level?"'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 0:
 				if loverdays[lover_number] < 20:
@@ -48,7 +48,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you goodbye on the lips while squeezing your ass with both hands.'
 				elseif loverdays[lover_number] >= 3:
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 3
-					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you on the lips, then pulls away from the kiss muttering in exasperation: "No sex today, huh?"'
+					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you on the lips, then pulls away from the kiss muttering in exasperation, "No sex today, huh?"'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
 				if loverdays[lover_number] < 10:
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you goodbye on the lips, hugging your waist.'
 				elseif loverdays[lover_number] >= 10:
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 2
-					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you goodbye on the lips and says: "Okay, I can live one day without sex.".'
+					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> kisses you goodbye on the lips and says, "Okay, I can live one day without sex.".'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 0:
 				if loverdays[lover_number] < 20:
@@ -85,7 +85,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> seems slightly annoyed. "What are you, a holy virgin?"'
 				elseif loverdays[lover_number] >= 3:
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 3
-					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> seems irritated "So you do not even want to kiss? Oh well."'
+					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> seems irritated. "So you do not even want to kiss? Oh well."'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
 				if loverdays[lover_number] < 10:
@@ -108,10 +108,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			if haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
 				if loverdays[lover_number] < 3:
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 2
-					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> is annoyed and tells you to go fuck yourself'
+					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> is annoyed and tells you to go fuck yourself.'
 				elseif loverdays[lover_number] >= 3:
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 4
-					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> is dissapointed and asks " What are you afraid of?"'
+					'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> is disappointed and asks, "What are you afraid of?"'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
 				if loverdays[lover_number] < 10:
@@ -153,12 +153,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					act 'Go to your apartment': gt 'din_npc', 'go_straight_home'
 
 				elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
-					'"Well then, see you, I''ll call you," he said quietly and left.'
+					'"Well then, see you, I''ll call you," he says quietly and leaves.'
 
 					act 'Go to your apartment': gt 'din_npc', 'go_straight_home'
 
 				elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
-					'"If your husband is in the apartment, maybe you can climb a little higher, perhaps up to the attic?" he says, with a sly grin.'
+					'"If your husband is in the apartment, maybe you can climb a little higher, perhaps up to the attic?" he says with a sly grin.'
 
 					act 'Refuse':
 						loverrelation[lover_number] -= 1
@@ -197,7 +197,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'room':
 
 	if haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
 		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> grabs you and rudely pushes you on your back. He starts to kiss you passionately and tries to take off your clothes.'
-		'Finally <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> won the difficult battle with your bra straps.'
+		'Finally, <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> won the difficult battle with your bra straps.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -213,8 +213,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'room':
 					loverrelation[lover_number] += 3
 					gt 'sexm', 'minet'
 				end
-
-				act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 			elseif sexrand = 1:
 				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want your ass."'
 
@@ -223,29 +221,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'room':
 					loverrelation[lover_number] += 5
 					gt 'sexm', 'anal'
 				end
-
-				act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 			elseif sexrand = 2:
 				'"Lie down and spread those gorgeous long legs, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 
 				act 'Spread her legs ':gt 'sexm', 'miss'
-				act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 			elseif sexrand = 3:
 				'"Get on your hands and knees, I want to fuck you like a bitch in heat."'
 
 				act 'Doggy-Style':gt 'sexm', 'dog'
-				act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 			end
 		elseif boyonce[lover_number] = 0:
 			'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> throws you on the bed and starts sucking on your breasts.'
 			gs 'arousal','breasts', 1
 
 			act 'Sex':gt 'sexm', 'miss'
-			act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 		end
+		act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 	elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
 		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> gently hugs you and starts to cuddle.'
-		'You undress and smoothly <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> asks you "how do you want it, darling?"'
+		'You undress, and smoothly, <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> asks you, "How do you want it, darling?"'
 
 		act 'I want whatever you want sweetie':
 			cla
@@ -259,8 +253,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'room':
 						loverrelation[lover_number] += 2
 						gt 'sexm', 'minet'
 					end
-
-					act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 				elseif sexrand = 1:
 					'"<<$pcs_firstname>>, I want to take you in the ass."'
 
@@ -269,26 +261,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'room':
 						loverrelation[lover_number] += 4
 						gt 'sexm', 'anal'
 					end
-
-					act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 				elseif sexrand = 2:
 					'"<<$pcs_firstname>>, I want you."'
 
 					act 'Spread her legs ':gt 'sexm', 'miss'
-					act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 				elseif sexrand = 3:
 					'"<<$pcs_firstname>>, I want to take you from behind."'
 
 					act 'Doggy-Style':gt 'sexm', 'dog'
-					act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 				end
 			elseif boyonce[lover_number] = 0:
 				'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> throws you on the bed and starts sucking on your breasts.'
 				gs 'arousal','breasts', 1
 
 				act 'Sex':gt 'sexm', 'miss'
-				act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 			end
+			act 'I don''t want to do this, let''s try something else':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
 		end
 
 		act 'Propose options':gt 'sexm', 'variant'
@@ -304,7 +292,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'variant':
 	if haraklover[lover_number] = 2:loverrelation[lover_number] -= 1
 	'<img src = "images/characters/shared/'+lover_picture[lover_number]+'.jpg">'
 
-	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> looks at you and is waiting for you to say something'
+	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> looks at you and waits for you to say something.'
 
 	act 'Lie down and spread your legs':gt 'sexm', 'miss'
 	act 'Doggy-Style':gt 'sexm', 'dog'
@@ -353,7 +341,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'minet':
 		gs 'cum_manage'
 		loverrelation[lover_number] += 3
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/mouth/cum30.jpg"></center>'
-		'A hot jet of sperm hits you in the mouth. You start to swallow his cum while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> continues to cum in your mouth. Finally the flow of hot liquid with a pungent taste stops.'
+		'A hot jet of sperm hits you in the mouth. You start to swallow his cum while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> continues to cum in your mouth. Finally, the flow of hot liquid with a pungent taste stops.'
 
 		act 'Leave':gt 'sexm', 'endsex'
 	end
@@ -381,7 +369,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'minet':
 					gs 'cum_manage'
 					loverrelation[lover_number] += 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/facial16.jpg"></center>'
-					'You took his dick out of your mouth and pointed it right at your face. You are now covered with <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>s warm and sticky cum.'
+					'You take his dick out of your mouth and point it right at your face. You are now covered with <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>''s warm and sticky cum.'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
 				facial += 1
@@ -407,7 +395,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hand':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/handjob/hand1.jpg"></center>'
 	'You take his <<loverdick[lover_number]>> centimeter penis and begin to caress it gently, moving the skin on the purple head back and forth.'
-	'Soon, your skillful movements makes the guy cum in your hands, covering them with warm and sticky sperm.'
+	'Soon, your skillful movements make the guy cum in your hands, covering them with warm and sticky sperm.'
 
 	if haraklover[lover_number] = 0:loverrelation[lover_number] -= 1
 	if haraklover[lover_number] = 1:loverrelation[lover_number] -= 5
@@ -451,7 +439,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'strapon':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/dom/pegging.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'You go to the drawer and put on your strapon. <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> gets ready on all fours on the bed.'
-	'You use some lubrication on the guys anus and stick the strapon in. While you fuck his ass he groans a lot and finally finishes. You remove the strapon from his ass and go to the bathroom.'
+	'You use some lubrication on the guy''s anus and stick the strapon in. While you fuck his ass, he groans a lot and finally finishes. You remove the strapon from his ass and go to the bathroom.'
 
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 30, 'dom'
@@ -482,9 +470,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 		analplugin = 0
 
 		if pcs_ass < 16 :
-			'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> has pulled the buttplug out of your narrow and tight ass'
+			*p '<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> pulls the butt plug out of your narrow and tight ass, '
 		elseif pcs_ass >= 16 :
-			' <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>pulled out your butt plug '
+			*p ' <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>pulls out your butt plug, '
 		end
 
 		'and you feel his hard cock resting on your ass.'
@@ -496,10 +484,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 		if pcs_ass + analpluginbonus < dick:
 			'You scream and bite your lip from the sharp pain you suddenly feel when his <<loverdick[lover_number]>> centimeter penis rips apart your ass when it enters.'
 		elseif pcs_ass + analpluginbonus >= dick:
-			'You groan slightly when you feel his <<loverdick[lover_number]>> centimeter dick enters your ass.'
+			'You groan slightly when you feel his <<loverdick[lover_number]>> centimeter dick enter your ass.'
 		end
 
-		'Finally <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> grabs your tight ass and starts slamming inside you fiercely. With one final thrust he finishes balls deep inside you.'
+		'Finally, <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> grabs your tight ass and starts slamming inside you fiercely. With one final thrust, he finishes balls deep inside you.'
 		spafinloc = 4
 		gs 'cum_manage'
 		minut += 3
@@ -512,7 +500,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 	else
 		if lubri = 0:
 			lubonus = 2
-			'You do not have any lubricant so <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> spits on his fingers to lubricate your ass.'
+			'You do not have any lubricant, so <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> spits on his fingers to lubricate your ass.'
 		elseif lubri > 0:
 			lubri -= 1
 			lubonus = 10
@@ -524,10 +512,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_finger', 10, 'dom'
 		gs 'stat'
 
-		if pcs_ass < 10:'When he enters the third finger you involuntarily groan in pain.'
-		if pcs_ass >= 10:'When he enters the third finger you can feel your anus getting stretched out.'
+		if pcs_ass < 10:'When he adds a third finger, you involuntarily groan in pain.'
+		if pcs_ass >= 10:'When he adds a third finger, you can feel your anus getting stretched out.'
 
-		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> pulls his fingers out of your buttocks and you feel his hard cock resting on your ass.'
+		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> pulls his fingers out of your buttocks, and you feel his hard cock resting on your ass.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 15, 'dom'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -538,7 +526,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 			'You groan slightly when you feel his cock entering your ass.'
 		end
 
-		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> stops for a moment to give your ass some time to adapt to the big dick inside. Then he starts moving again with a lot more force then before.'
+		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> stops for a moment to give your ass some time to adapt to the big dick inside. Then he starts moving again with a lot more force than before.'
 
 		if pcs_ass + lubonus + 2 < loverdick[lover_number]:
 			if pcs_makeup > 1:pcs_makeup = 0
@@ -548,7 +536,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 			'You start to moan rhythmically following the pace of the movements of the dick inside you.'
 		end
 
-		'Finally <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> grabs your tight ass and starts slamming inside you with all his might. With one final thrust he finishes balls deep inside you.'
+		'Finally, <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> grabs your tight ass and starts slamming inside you with all his might. With one final thrust, he finishes balls deep inside you.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'dom', 'rough'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -561,7 +549,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'anal':
 			spafinloc = 3
 			gs 'cum_manage'
 
-			'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> takes his dick out of you and gives you a kiss.  You get up and use the bathroom.'
+			'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> takes his dick out of you and gives you a kiss. You get up and use the bathroom.'
 		end
 
 		if pcs_ass < dick:pcs_ass += 1
@@ -584,7 +572,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'miss':
 	gs 'cum_manage'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/vag/miss/vag.jpg"></center>'
-	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> spreads your legs and begins to fondle your pussy with his fingers. Once he is satisfied that you are ready he takes you vigorously.'
+	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> spreads your legs and begins to fondle your pussy with his fingers. Once he is satisfied that you are ready, he takes you vigorously.'
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 5
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 25
@@ -606,7 +594,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dog':
 	gs 'cum_manage'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/vag/doggy/dog1.jpg"></center>'
-	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> made you get on all fours and spread your pussy before he enters.'
+	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> makes you get on all fours and spread your pussy before he enters.'
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'dom'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -619,7 +607,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'startPod':
 	podrand = rand(0, 1)
 
 	if podrand = 0:
-		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> whispered to you, take it in your mouth.'
+		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> whispers to you, "Take it in your mouth."'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 			act 'Fuck off! (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -633,9 +621,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'startPod':
 			act 'Fuck off! (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end	
 
-		act 'use your mouth':gt 'sexm', 'blow'
+		act 'Use your mouth':gt 'sexm', 'blow'
 	elseif podrand = 1:
-		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> began to strip off your clothes.'
+		'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> begins to strip off your clothes.'
 
 		gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -665,7 +653,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'doggy':
 	gs 'cum_manage'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/vag/doggy/dog.jpg"></center>'
-	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> made you get on all fours and spread your pussy before he enters.'
+	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> makes you get on all fours and spread your pussy before he enters.'
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'dom'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -679,7 +667,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'blow':
 	minut += 20
 	gs 'stat'
-	'You squatted and <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> pulled out his penis.'
+	'You squat, and <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> pulls out his penis.'
 
 	act 'Take by mouth':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -704,7 +692,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow':
 			spafinloc = 12
 			gs 'cum_manage'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/mouth/cum30.jpg"></center>'
-			'A hot jet of sperm hit you in the mouth. You started to swallow his cum while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> continued to cum in your mouth. Finally the flow of hot liquid with a pungent taste stopped.'
+			'A hot jet of sperm hits you in the mouth. You start to swallow his cum while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> continues to cum in your mouth. Finally, the flow of hot liquid with a pungent taste stops.'
 
 			act 'Leave':
 				cla
@@ -736,7 +724,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow':
 						spafinloc = 11
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/facial16.jpg"></center>'
-						'You took his dick out of your mouth and pointed it right at your face. You are now covered with <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>''s warm and sticky cum.'
+						'You take his dick out of your mouth and point it right at your face. You are now covered with <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>''s warm and sticky cum.'
 					end
 				elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
 					facial += 1
@@ -766,7 +754,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/handjob/hand1.jpg"></center>'
 		'You take his <<loverdick[lover_number]>> centimeter penis in your hands and begin to caress it gently.'
-		'Soon, your skillful movements makes the guy cum in your hands, covering them with warm and sticky sperm.'
+		'Soon, your skillful movements make the guy cum in your hands, covering them with warm and sticky sperm.'
 
 		if haraklover[lover_number] = 0:loverrelation[lover_number] -= 1
 		if haraklover[lover_number] = 1:loverrelation[lover_number] -= 5
@@ -784,7 +772,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blow':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'gangrape':
-	'You begin to struggle and one of the guys hits you with his hand on your cheek, saying, "Shut up slut! Now spread your legs! We will fuck you up now!"'
+	'You begin to struggle, and one of the guys hits you with his hand on your cheek, saying, "Shut up slut! Now spread your legs! We will fuck you up now!"'
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'Stranger', rand(18,45)
 	gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 	act 'Obey':gt 'sexm', 'gangbang'
@@ -842,9 +830,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gangbang':
 
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/group/gangbang.jpg"></center>'
-	'One of the guys lives nearby and he drags you into his apartment. There he started tearing off your clothes.'
-	'Once you are completely naked they put you on your knees. One of them shoves his dick inside your mouth. They give you a cock in each hand and instruct you to start jerking them off. They make you feel like a real whore.'
-	'Suddenly one of the boys pushes you on the couch and grabs you by the waist. He thrusts his cock deep inside your pussy, you do not have time to react to this because you get two cocks shoved into your mouth at once.'
+	'One of the guys lives nearby, and he drags you into his apartment. There, he starts tearing off your clothes.'
+	'Once you are completely naked, they put you on your knees. One of them shoves his dick inside your mouth. They give you a cock in each hand and instruct you to start jerking them off. They make you feel like a real whore.'
+	'Suddenly, one of the boys pushes you on the couch and grabs you by the waist. He thrusts his cock deep inside your pussy. You do not have time to react to this because you get two cocks shoved into your mouth at once immediately after.'
 	'You feel a cold sensation on your ass. It looks like they are rubbing some lubrication there. Then you feel something big and solid at your rear entrance.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'gangbang', 'sub'
@@ -864,24 +852,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'gangbang':
 		gs 'stat'
 	
 		if pcs_ass >= 10:
-			'Two cocks are hammering you from behind, you can feel like them rubbing through the thin barriers between the anus and the vaginal wall. You are starting to get wet while the two cocks enthusiastically continue to pound.'
+			'Two cocks are hammering you from behind. You can feel them rubbing through the thin barriers between the anus and the vaginal wall. You start to get wet while the two cocks enthusiastically continue to pound.'
 		elseif pcs_ass < 10:
 			pcs_horny += (10 - pcs_ass)
-			'You are crying very hard from the severe pain you feel from the hard cock ramming your ass while another cock is fucking you in your pussy.'
+			'You cry very hard from the severe pain you feel from the hard cock ramming your ass while another cock is fucking you in your pussy.'
 		end
 
 		if pcs_horny >= 90:
 			$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'You can feel the sensation in your stomach begins to grow and soon your whole body is overtaken by a shock as you moan through your orgasm.'
+			$orgasm_txt = 'You can feel the sensation in your stomach begin to grow, and soon, your whole body is overtaken by a shock as you moan through your orgasm.'
 		end
 
-		'It seems the guys have played enough with you and they have decided to come on your face. They removed their dicks from your holes and point them at you.'
+		'It seems the guys have played enough with you, and they have decided to cum on your face. They remove their dicks from your holes and point them at you.'
 
 		act 'Get on your knees':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/group/gangbang2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You humbly knelt before the guys, they quickly surround you and they all start to cum on your face, covering it with sticky, warm and fragrant sperm.'
-			'After the boys spent their load they lost interest in you and began to leave.'
+			'You humbly kneel before the guys. They quickly surround you, and they all start to cum on your face, covering it with sticky, warm and fragrant sperm.'
+			'After the boys spend their load, they lose interest in you and begin to leave.'
 
 			act 'Leave':
 				cla
@@ -900,10 +888,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 
 	if popolaini = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/p0.jpg"></center>'
-		'Just as you were about to go to the bathroom to wash up you husband walked in and caught you kneeling in front of a naked man while you are covered in semen.'
+		'Just as you are about to go to the bathroom to wash up, you husband walks in and catches you kneeling in front of a naked man while you are covered in semen.'
 	elseif popolaini = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/p5.jpg"></center>'
-		'Just as you changed position your husband entered the room.'
+		'Just as you change position, your husband enters the room.'
 	end
 
 	!!if popolaini = 2:
@@ -912,8 +900,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 	!!end
 	
 	if harakHusb = 0:
-		'"Honey what''s happening here? why are you cheating on me?" stammered <<$husName>> while looking at you.'
-		'"<<$husName>> it''s not what you think. It''s just sex, no feelings, I only love you. He does not mean anything. Come to me, I''ll show you how much I love you. " you answered him. You know you are caught red-handed so you made up some excuse on the spot but you don''t really think he will believe this.'
+		'"Honey what''s happening here? why are you cheating on me?" stammers <<$husName>> while looking at you.'
+		'"<<$husName>> it''s not what you think. It''s just sex, no feelings, I only love you. He does not mean anything. Come to me, I''ll show you how much I love you. " you answer him. You know you are caught red-handed, so you make up some excuse on the spot, but you don''t really think he will believe this.'
 
 		if izvratH = 0:
 			husbizvradd = 0
@@ -922,7 +910,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 			husband = 0
 			divorced += 1
 			gs 'boyStat', $lover[lover_number]
-			'"No, I''m going, you betrayed our love." he faltered and ran out of the room almost sobbing.'
+			'"No, I''m going, you betrayed our love." he falters and runs out of the room almost sobbing.'
 
 
 			if haraklover[lover_number] = 0:
@@ -932,7 +920,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 				act 'Leave':  gt 'din_npc', 'go_straight_home'
 
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
-				'"Well, I see you are not only for me, so perhaps I''ll go, but if you want I can stay and comfort you " said <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>'
+				'"Well, I see you are not only for me, so perhaps I''ll go, but if you want, I can stay and comfort you " says <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>.'
 
 				act 'Let him go': gt 'din_npc', 'go_straight_home'
 
@@ -946,7 +934,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 					xgt 'sex', 'var'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
-				'"This is a surprise, but oh well that clown ran away, and I am once again ready. Let''s continue and let this wimp go" said <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, clearly intending to continue the evening.'
+				'"This is a surprise, but oh well that clown ran away, and I am once again ready. Let''s continue and let this wimp go" says <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, clearly intending to continue the evening.'
 
 				act 'Refuse':
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 1
@@ -963,8 +951,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 				end
 			end
 		elseif izvratH = 1:
-			'"You really only love me?" asked <<$husName>>.'
-			'"Yes, I will do everything with you like he did, but it will be with love now and you will understand the difference" you replied. You are amazed at how he believes in this nonsense. <<$husName>> came up to you and you unbuttoned his pants to reveal his dick.'
+			'"You really only love me?" asks <<$husName>>.'
+			'"Yes, I will do everything with you I did with him, but it will be with love, and you will understand the difference," you reply. You are amazed he believes this nonsense. <<$husName>> comes up to you, and you unbutton his pants to reveal his dick.'
 
 			if haraklover[lover_number] = 0:
 				gs 'lover', 'remove', lover_number
@@ -973,21 +961,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 				husbandMark = 0
 				husband = 0
 				divorced += 1
-				'"So you''re married! you deceived me even though I loved you. You are a despicable liar. Goodbye!" your guy shouted and ran out of the room.'
-				'"He''s right, you''re a liar, and you do not deserve me, you''re a fallen woman, I don''t want to see you again" You husband burst into tears and ran out to follow the guy.'
+				'"So you''re married! You deceived me even though I loved you. You are a despicable liar. Goodbye!" your guy shouted and ran out of the room.'
+				'"He''s right, you''re a liar, and you do not deserve me, you''re a fallen woman, I don''t want to see you again." You husband bursts into tears and runs out to follow the guy.'
 
 				act 'Leave': gt 'din_npc', 'go_straight_home'
 
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
-				'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> stood by you and watched as you fucked your husband, "Wow, you seem to really enjoy sex with your husband. This really can''t compare to what we did. Well maybe you can use your mouth and I can still be useful" he said.'
-				'"Sure, come on." perked <<$husName>> "Dear lie down on the bed"'
+				'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> stands by you and watches as you fuck your husband. "Wow, you seem to really enjoy sex with your husband. This really can''t compare to what we did. Well maybe you can use your mouth, and I can still be useful," he says.'
+				'"Sure, come on," pipes up <<$husName>>. "Dear lie down on the bed."'
 
 				act 'Lie down':
 					*clr & cla
 					houseslut += 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/p1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You lie down on the bed and <<$husName>> enters your pussy while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> lies before you and moves his cock to your mouth. You diligently work your husband''s cock while not forgetting your lover''s cock in your mouth.'
-					'"Mmm <<$pcs_nickname>> I have never seen you so enthusiastic when we were together. Maybe we should try some other positions" proposed <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, and your husband agreed.'
+					'You lie down on the bed, and <<$husName>> enters your pussy while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> lies before you and moves his cock to your mouth. You diligently work your husband''s cock while not forgetting your lover''s cock in your mouth.'
+					'"Mmm <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have never seen you so enthusiastic when we were together. Maybe we should try some other positions," proposes <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, and your husband agreed.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -1003,15 +991,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 					end
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
-				'"That''s right, her mouth is great, but her ass is even better. You fuck her ass, and I''ll fuck her mouth. With her ass she can show you if she really loves you, or not. " said <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, explicitly directed at your husband.'
-				'"Yeah, come to bed, see how I am going to love your ass, " said <<$husName>>.'
+				'"That''s right, her mouth is great, but her ass is even better. You fuck her ass, and I''ll fuck her mouth. With her ass, she can show you if she really loves you or not," says <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, explicitly directed at your husband.'
+				'"Yeah, come to bed, see how I am going to love your ass," says <<$husName>>.'
 
 				act 'Lie down':
 					*clr & cla
 					houseslut += 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/p2.jpg"></center>'
-					'You lie down on the bed and <<$husName>> enters you in the anus, while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> lies before you, presenting his cock to your mouth. You diligently work your husband''s cock in your ass while not forgetting your lover''s cock in your mouth.'
-					'"If you remove your dick from her ass now then she can really show you how much she loves you." proposed <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, and the husband agreed.'
+					'You lie down on the bed, and <<$husName>> enters you in the anus, while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> lies before you, presenting his cock to your mouth. You diligently work your husband''s cock in your ass while not forgetting your lover''s cock in your mouth.'
+					'"If you remove your dick from her ass now, then she can really show you how much she loves you," proposes <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, and your husband agreed.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -1035,21 +1023,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 		husband = 0
 		divorced += 1
 		gs 'boyStat', $lover[lover_number]
-		'"What the hell is going on here? " said <<$husName>> while looking at you.'
-		'"<<$husName>> it''s not what you think. It''s just sex, no feelings, I only love you. He does not mean anything. Come to me, I''ll show you how much I love you. " you answered him. You know you are caught red-handed so you made up some excuse on the spot but you don''t really think he will believe this.'
+		'"What the hell is going on here? " says <<$husName>> while looking at you.'
+		'"<<$husName>> it''s not what you think. It''s just sex, no feelings, I only love you. He does not mean anything. Come to me, I''ll show you how much I love you," you answer him. You know you are caught red-handed, so you make up some excuse on the spot, but you don''t really think he will believe this.'
 
 		if izvratH = 0:
-			'"You filthy slut. What love? You fuck with everyone. Let''s see if you will still like it in the forest you whore." he said and left the room, slamming the door.'
+			'"You filthy slut. What love? You fuck everyone. Let''s see if you will still like it in the forest you whore," he says and leaves the room, slamming the door.'
 
 
 			if haraklover[lover_number] = 0:
 				gs 'lover', 'remove', lover_number
-				'"Wait, you''re married!, you deceived me even though I loved you. Goodbye!" your guy shouted and ran out of the room.'
+				'"Wait, you''re married! You deceived me even though I loved you. Goodbye!" your guy shouts and runs out of the room.'
 
 				act 'Leave': gt 'din_npc', 'go_straight_home'
 				
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
-				'"Well, I see I am not the only one for you, so perhaps I''ll go. But if you want I can stay and comfort you" said <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>'
+				'"Well, I see I am not the only one for you, so perhaps I''ll go, but if you want, I can stay and comfort you" says <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>.'
 
 				act 'Let him go': gt 'din_npc', 'go_straight_home'
 
@@ -1062,7 +1050,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 					xgt 'sex', 'var'
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
-				'"Well this is a surprise, but oh well it looks like your hubby dumped you, and I am once again ready, let''s continue. Let this cuckold run away like a little bitch" said <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, clearly intending to continue the evening.'
+				'"Well this is a surprise, but oh well it looks like your hubby dumped you, and I am once again ready, let''s continue. Let this cuckold run away like a little bitch," says <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, clearly intending to continue the evening.'
 
 				act 'Refuse':
 					loverrelation[lover_number] -= 1
@@ -1080,9 +1068,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 			end
 		elseif izvratH = 1:
 			gs 'lover', 'remove', lover_number
-			'"Can you even hear yourself while you are talking nonsense?" asked <<$husName>>.'
-			'"I''m sorry" I muttered while looking at the floor'
-			'<<$husName>> came up to you. "I''ll leave today and will file for divorce, but first, I will punish you, " he said while unzipping his pants and pulling out his penis. "Well, what are you wating for? Suck, whore!"'
+			'"Can you even hear yourself while you are talking nonsense?" asks <<$husName>>.'
+			'"I''m sorry," you mutter while looking at the floor.'
+			'<<$husName>> comes up to you. "I''ll leave today and will file for divorce, but first, I will punish you," he says while unzipping his pants and pulling out his penis. "Well, what are you waiting for? Suck, whore!"'
 
 			if haraklover[lover_number] = 0:
 				act 'Take by mouth':
@@ -1090,8 +1078,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 					spafinloc = 12
 					gs 'Cum_Manage'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/p3.jpg"></center>'
-					'"So you''re married? You cheated on me even though I loved you. You despicable liar! goodbye!" your guy shouted and ran out of the room.'
-					'<<$husName>> did not pay any attention to him, he put his dick in your mouth and grabbed your head. He literally started to fuck you in the mouth with each thrust pushing it deeper. You were frantically grasping and trying to breathe, desperately trying not to choke as he continued, suddenly he made an abrupt movement and his cock popped into your throat, you try to pull away, but he sternly tells you to take it. He gave you a couple of seconds to get used to the dick in your throat and began to fuck your throat, you are still not getting enough air and you frantically begin to beat him to get free, but this makes <<$husName>> only tighten his grip on your head. When you''re starting to lose consciousness, he finally finishes. You feel his sperm go down your throat. After a couple of strong aftershocks he lets you go. You collapse on the floor coughing up sperm mixed with your saliva and wheezing air. <<$husName>> looked at you as you writhe on the floor. He spits on the floor next to you, and leaves the room.'
+					'"So you''re married? You cheated on me even though I loved you. You despicable liar! goodbye!" your guy shouts and runs out of the room.'
+					'<<$husName>> does not pay any attention to him. He puts his dick in your mouth and grabs your head. He literally starts to fuck you in the mouth with each thrust pushing it deeper. You frantically gasp, trying to breathe, desperately trying not to choke as he continues. Suddenly, he makes an abrupt movement, and his cock pops into your throat. You try to pull away, but he sternly tells you to take it. He gives you a couple of seconds to get used to the dick in your throat and begins to thrust. You are still not getting enough air, and you frantically begin to beat him to get free, but this only makes <<$husName>> tighten his grip on your head. When you''re starting to lose consciousness, he finally finishes. You feel his sperm go down your throat. After a couple of strong aftershocks, he lets you go. You collapse on the floor, coughing up sperm mixed with your saliva and wheezing air. <<$husName>> looks at you as you writhe on the floor. He spits on the floor next to you and leaves the room.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -1102,16 +1090,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 					end
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 1:
-				'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> stood and watched as you get fucked by your husband, "Well, I''ll probably go." he said.'
-				'"Wait! This whore can handle two cocks. You can join us if you want." offered <<$husName>>.'
-				'"Thanks for the offer, I do believe she will be able to handle me." replied <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>'
+				'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> stands and watches as you get fucked by your husband. "Well, I should probably go," he says.'
+				'"Wait! This whore can handle two cocks. You can join us if you want," offers <<$husName>>.'
+				'"Thanks for the offer, I do believe she will be able to handle me," replies <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>.'
 
 				act 'Lie on the bed':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/p1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You lie down on the bed and <<$husName>> enters your pussy while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> lies before you and moves his cock to your mouth. You diligently work your husband''s cock while not forgetting your lover''s cock in your mouth.'
-					'"she is still a great fuck, " said the husband.'
-					'"I could not agree more" replied <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>'
+					'You lie down on the bed, and <<$husName>> enters your pussy while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> lies before you and moves his cock to your mouth. You diligently work your husband''s cock while not forgetting your lover''s cock in your mouth.'
+					'"She is still a great fuck, " says your husband.'
+					'"I could not agree more," replies <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub', 'group'
@@ -1127,15 +1115,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 					end
 				end
 			elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
-				'"That''s right this whore should be punished, if you want to let me help we can do it together and she will not be able to sit down for a week, " said <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, explicitly riling up your husband.'
-				'"Yes, let''s punish the bitch, and then I can go to the authorities to initiate my divorce and remove this whore from my life" said <<$husName>>.'
+				'"That''s right, this whore should be punished. If you want to let me help, we can do it together, and she will not be able to sit down for a week," says <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, explicitly riling up your husband.'
+				'"Yes, let''s punish the bitch, and then I can go to the authorities to initiate my divorce and remove this whore from my life," says <<$husName>>.'
 
 				act 'Lie on the bed':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/p2.jpg"></center>'
-					'You lie down on the bed and <<$husName>> entered your anus while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> lay before you presenting his cock to your mouth. You diligently work your husband''s cock in your ass while not forgetting your lover''s cock in your mouth.'
-					'"Wow, even now she knows how to work that ass " said <<$husName>>.'
-					'"Yeah, please leave some for me" replied <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>'
+					'You lie down on the bed, and <<$husName>> enters your anus while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> lies before you, presenting his cock to your mouth. You diligently work your husband''s cock in your ass while not forgetting your lover''s cock in your mouth.'
+					'"Wow, even now she knows how to work that ass," says <<$husName>>.'
+					'"Yeah, please leave some for me," replies <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub', 'group'
@@ -1154,7 +1142,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 		end
 	elseif harakHusb = 2:
 		fingal += 1
-		'"Oh damn," was the last thing you heared before you were thrown to the wall by a powerful blow to the face.'
+		'"Oh damn," is the last thing you hear before you are thrown to the wall by a powerful blow to the face.'
 
 		if izvratH = 0:
 			husbizvradd = 0
@@ -1168,19 +1156,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'popala':
 			stolmoney = 0
 			money = 0
 			komp = 0
-			'while getting up you could see in the corner of the room your husband giving blow after blow to your lover, and <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> was trying hard to escape out the door, finally he succeeds and he runs out of the apartment at a breakneck pace.'
-			'<<$husName>> looked at you, "Here... you... whore... cock... and pussy... and ass... and in your mouth." he says putting a strong emphasis on every word. At the end of the last word, he kicks you in the face, rendering you unconscious. You woke up two hours later. Your husband was gone and so was all of his stuff. Some of your stuff was missing too'
+			'While getting up, you can see in the corner of the room your husband giving blow after blow to <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> as he tries hard to escape out the door. Finally, your lover succeeds, and he runs out of the apartment at a breakneck pace.'
+			'<<$husName>> looks at you. "Here... you... whore... cock... and pussy... and ass... and in your mouth," he says putting a strong emphasis on every word. At the end of the last word, he kicks you in the face, rendering you unconscious. You wake up two hours later. Your husband is gone and so is all of his stuff. Some of your stuff is missing too.'
 
 			act 'Leave': gt 'din_npc', 'go_straight_home'
 
 		elseif izvratH = 1:
 			gs 'lover', 'remove', lover_number
 			houseslut += 1
-			'"Oh damn, she allowed you inside of her?" asked <<$husName>>, "So now you will need to pay me for the pleasure of using her. This is my slut! " he added, referring to you. "Once that is settled we will fuck her together." he added, lifting you off the floor and throwing you on the bed.'
+			'"Oh damn, she allowed you inside of her?" asks <<$husName>>. "So now you will need to pay me for the pleasure of using her. This is my slut!" he adds, referring to you. "Once that is settled, we will fuck her together," he continues, lifting you off the floor and throwing you on the bed.'
 
-			if haraklover[lover_number] = 0:'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> tried to protest, but after seeing your husband''s face contorted with rage he agreed'
-			if haraklover[lover_number] = 1:'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> silently complied to your husband''s request'
-			if haraklover[lover_number] = 2:'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> gladly accepted'
+			if haraklover[lover_number] = 0:'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> tries to protest, but after seeing your husband''s face contorted with rage, he agrees'
+			if haraklover[lover_number] = 1:'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> silently complies with your husband''s request.'
+			if haraklover[lover_number] = 2:'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> gladly accepts'
 
 			act 'Continue':
 				if popolaini = 1:picrand = 40

locations/sexorg.qsrc

@@ -10,144 +10,67 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
-	sexorgrand = rand(0, 6)
+	cla
+	*clr
+	sexvar += 1
 
+	sexorgrand = rand(0, 6)
 	if sexorgrand = 0:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
-
-		if orsxbj = 0:
-			orsxbj = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/bowling/sex/minet<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'The two of you switch back and forth between sucking one guy''s cock for a while, getting off on his moans of pleasure but never pushing him so far that he could actually cum. Every now and then, you both lick his head simultaneously, french kissing while your "victim" watches and enjoys.'
+		'You and one of the girls switch back and forth sucking one guy''s cock for a while, getting off on his moans of pleasure but never pushing him so far that he could actually cum. Every now and then, you both lick his head simultaneously, French kissing while your "victim" watches and enjoys.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 		gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 		minut -= 10
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		act 'Continue the orgy':gt 'sexorg', 'var'
-
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Let the guys finish.':gt 'sexorg', 'end'
 	elseif sexorgrand = 1:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/bowling/sex/vag<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 		'You watch as one of the girls gets her pussy filled from behind by a big cock, listening to her loud moans and idly rubbing your own clit while you wait your turn.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 10
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		act 'Continue the orgy':gt 'sexorg', 'var'
-
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Let the guys finish.':gt 'sexorg', 'end'
 	elseif sexorgrand = 2:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
-
-		if orsxsex = 0:
-			orsxsex = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/bowling/sex/uvag<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You lie down on your back and almost instantly feel his cock entering your moist cunt. His movements are fast and rough and you''d cry out in ecstacy if it wasn''t for the pussy you were busy licking.'
+		'You lie down on your back and almost instantly feel one of the guys'' cocks entering your moist cunt. His movements are fast and rough, and you''d cry out in ecstasy if it weren''t for the pussy you are busy licking.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub', 'group', 'rough'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 		minut -= 10
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		act 'Continue the orgy':gt 'sexorg', 'var'
-
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Let the guys finish.':gt 'sexorg', 'end'
 	elseif sexorgrand = 3:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/bowling/sex/anal<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You don''t break eye contact with her - you don''t even know their names - as she lowers herself onto him, impaling her tight ass on his hard dick. "You''d love to take my place, wouldn''t you?", she asks sweetly, then cries out as her partner loses patience and starts fucking her from below. You don''t have to answer - the fingers you have buried in your pussy as you watch tell her everything she needs to know.'
+		'You watch one of the girls - you don''t even know her name - not breaking eye contact with her as she lowers herself onto one of the guys, impaling her tight ass on his hard dick. "You''d love to take my place, wouldn''t you?" she asks sweetly, then cries out as her partner loses patience and starts fucking her from below. You don''t have to answer - the fingers you have buried in your pussy as you watch tell her everything she needs to know.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 10
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		act 'Continue the orgy':gt 'sexorg', 'var'
-
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Let the guys finish.':gt 'sexorg', 'end'
 	elseif sexorgrand = 4:
-		cla
-		*clr
-
-		if orsxanal = 0:
-			pdsxanal = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/bowling/sex/uanal<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You were not as well prepared as you thought you''d be and it hurts a little as he pushes past your sphincter, but soon the pain is forgotten and replaced by a pleasant sense of fullness... and that''s before he starts really fucking you. You mean into the girl''s cunt and enjoy yourself.'
+		'You are not as well prepared as you thought you were, and it hurts a little as one of the guys pushes past your sphincter, but soon the pain is forgotten and replaced by a pleasant sense of fullness... and that''s before he starts really fucking you. You lean into the girl in front of you''s cunt and enjoy yourself.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub', 'group', 'rough'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 		minut -= 10
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		act 'Continue the orgy':gt 'sexorg', 'var'
-
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Let the guys finish.':gt 'sexorg', 'end'
 	elseif sexorgrand = 5:
-		cla
-		*clr
-
-		if orsxbj = 0:
-			orsxbj = 1
-		end
-
-		if orsxsex = 0:
-			orsxsex = 1
-		end
-
-		if orsxanal = 0:
-			orsxanal = 1
-		end
-
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/bowling/sex/udp<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'At first you were a little reluctant about being double penetrated - the two guys were both pretty well endowed, after all - but in the end, your curiosity and horniness won over all concerns and you thoroughly enjoy the feeling of having both your nether holes filled at the same time.'
+		'At first you are a little reluctant about being double penetrated - the two guys are both pretty well endowed, after all - but in the end, your curiosity and horniness wins over all concerns, and you thoroughly enjoy the feeling of having both your nether holes filled at the same time.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub', 'group', 'rough'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub', 'group', 'rough'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 		minut -= 10
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		act 'Continue the orgy':gt 'sexorg', 'var'
-
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Let the guys finish.':gt 'sexorg', 'end'
-	elseif sexorgrand = 6:
-		cla
-		*clr
-		sexvar += 1
+	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/bowling/sex/dp<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'Her expression of bliss and loud utterances leave no doubt in your mind: Having her ass and pussy filled at the same time has sent this girl straight to heaven and while you watch on in jealousy, you have no other choice than to rub your clit and wait your turn.'
+		'Her expression of bliss and loud utterances leave no doubt in your mind: having her ass and pussy filled at the same time has sent this girl straight to heaven, and while you watch on in jealousy, you have no other choice than to rub your clit and wait your turn.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 10
-		gs 'stat'
-		
-		act 'Continue the orgy':gt 'sexorg', 'var'
-
-		if sexvar >= 3:act 'Let the guys finish.':gt 'sexorg', 'end'
 	end
+	
+	gs 'stat'
+	act 'Continue the orgy':gt 'sexorg', 'var'
+	if sexvar >= 3:act 'Let the guys finish.':gt 'sexorg', 'end'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	cla
 	*clr
-	orsxbj = 0
-	orsxsex = 0
-	orsxanal = 0
-	sexvar = 0
+	killvar 'sexvar'
+	killvar 'sexorgrand'
 	spafinloc = 12
 	gs 'cum_manage'
 
@@ -156,7 +79,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end':
 	end
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/bowling/sex/cum<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'They put you and the other two girls on your knees in front of them and furiously stroke their dicks into your expectant mouths. You barely even taste the sperm, even though you catch a full spurt of it on your tongue - to you, it marks the end of a thrilling adventure. It''s not every day that you have an orgy in a bowling center.'
+	'The guys put you and the other two girls on your knees in front of them and furiously stroke their dicks into your expectant mouths. You barely even taste the sperm, even though you catch a full spurt of it on your tongue - to you, it marks the end of a thrilling adventure. It''s not every day that you have an orgy in a bowling center.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'

locations/sexshop.qsrc

@@ -21,10 +21,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
 	'The main counter displays various sex toys:'
 	'Lubricant - 145 <b>₽</b>'
-	'Dildo starting at - 800 <b>₽</b>'
+	'Dildo - starting at 800 <b>₽</b>'
 	'Vibrator - 800 <b>₽</b>'
-	'Strapon harness starting at 1,200 <b>₽</b>'
-	'Butt plug 1,200 <b>₽</b>'
+	'Strap-on harness - starting at 1,200 <b>₽</b>'
+	'Butt plug - 1,200 <b>₽</b>'
 	*nl
 	'In the basement are the private booths for viewing porn movies (50 <b>₽</b> 15 minutes).'
 
@@ -32,13 +32,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 	if analplug = 1 and dildo = 1 and hotcat >= 5 and Peter = 0:
 		if rand(0,1) = 1:
-			'You see an interesting looking middle-aged man, apparently he is the owner of this store.'
+			'You see an interesting looking middle-aged man. Apparently, he is the owner of this store.'
 
 			act 'Introduce yourself to the owner of the store' :
 				*clr & cla
 				menu_off = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/peter/peter.jpg"></center>'
-				'I''m Peter, I''ve been watching you for a long time. I often see you here. I find you rather interesting...'
+				'"I''m Peter, I''ve been watching you for a long time. I often see you here. I find you rather interesting..."'
 
 				act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 				act 'Go with Peter': gt 'Peterroom', 'start'
@@ -69,7 +69,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut = minut + 60
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/studio/pierre_2.jpg"></center>'
-					'Peter smiles, and says "New actresses are always welcome. However, in this business, many women do not take well to the work. You will have to do an audition, and if you do well, you can have the job."'
+					'Peter smiles and says, "New actresses are always welcome. However in this business, many women do not take well to the work. You will have to do an audition, and if you do well, you can have the job."'
 					'"I''ll tell you about the work here and now, but under one condition - you have to undress".'
 
 					act 'Undress':
@@ -87,7 +87,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/studio/film_0.jpg"></center>'
 								'"And then comes the filming itself, which is the most exciting and fun part."'
-								'"And after the filming, we create a video to sell it for profit!"'
+								'"And after the filming, we create a video to sell for profit!"'
 
 								act '...':
 									*clr & cla
@@ -215,7 +215,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 800
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 			end
@@ -229,7 +229,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 800
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 			end
@@ -248,7 +248,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 850
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 15cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 15cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -262,7 +262,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 850
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 15cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 15cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -281,7 +281,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 900
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 20cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 20cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -295,7 +295,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 900
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 20cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 20cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -378,7 +378,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 950
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 25cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 25cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -392,7 +392,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 950
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 25cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 25cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -411,7 +411,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 1000
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 30cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 30cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -425,7 +425,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 1000
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 30cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 30cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -444,7 +444,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 1100
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 35cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 35cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -458,7 +458,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 1100
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 35cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 35cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -477,7 +477,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 1200
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 40cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 40cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -491,7 +491,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 1200
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a 40cm long dildo and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a 40cm long dildo and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop','start'
 			end
@@ -510,7 +510,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 800
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a vibrator and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a vibrator and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 			end
@@ -524,7 +524,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 800
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a vibrator and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a vibrator and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 			end
@@ -545,7 +545,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					money -= 1200
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-					'You bought a strap-on and paid the cashier.'
+					'You buy a strap-on and pay the cashier.'
 
 					act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 				end
@@ -561,7 +561,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					karta -= 1200
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-					'You bought a strap-on and paid the cashier.'
+					'You buy a strap-on and pay the cashier.'
 
 					act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 				end
@@ -576,7 +576,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					money -= 500
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-					'You bought a strap-on and paid the cashier. You have to attach one of your dildos to it.'
+					'You buy a strap-on and pay the cashier. You have to attach one of your dildos to it.'
 
 					act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 				end
@@ -590,7 +590,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					karta -= 500
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-					'You bought a strap-on and paid the cashier. You have to attach one of your dildos to it.'
+					'You buy a strap-on and pay the cashier. You have to attach one of your dildos to it.'
 
 					act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 				end
@@ -610,7 +610,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				money -= 800
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a butt plug and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a butt plug and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 			end
@@ -624,7 +624,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				karta -= 800
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sexshop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bought a butt plug and paid the cashier.'
+				'You buy a butt plug and pay the cashier.'
 
 				act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 			end
@@ -834,7 +834,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Booth movies</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/gloryhole/ghbooths.jpg"></center>'
-	'Small cabinet with a TV on the wall, terminal and two holes in the walls at waist level.'
+	'A small cabinet with a TV on the wall, terminal and two holes in the walls at waist level.'
 	if mistressqwest > 0 and mistressqwest <= 20:
 		GHchance = rand(6,10)
 		ghnowcheck = ghnow		
@@ -852,10 +852,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 			cla
 			money -= 50
 			minut += 15
-			'Once you have paid the money, the TV on the wall begins showing porn movies.'
-			'You sit in a chair and watch the porn. You began to get a little excited.'
+			'Once you pay the money, the TV on the wall begins showing porn movies.'
+			'You sit in a chair and watch the porn. You begin to get a little excited.'
 
-			act 'The movie ended':gt 'sexshop', 'pip'
+			act 'The movie ends':gt 'sexshop', 'pip'
 
 			act 'Masturbate':
 				cla
@@ -864,7 +864,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'	
 
-				act 'The movie ended':gt 'sexshop', 'pip'
+				act 'The movie ends':gt 'sexshop', 'pip'
 			end
 
 			
@@ -883,8 +883,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 					fingerRand = rand(1, 5)
 					! WD: Rename missing Image ~  'ghFinger.jpg' to 'ghFinger5.jpg'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/gloryhole/ghfinger<<fingerRand>>.jpg"></center>'
-					'You poke your finger in the hole, letting them know that you are ready to serve the stranger.'
-					'The stranger slips ' + iif(ghnow < 5, '300', '150') +	'<b>₽</b> into the hole, and then his erect cock pokes out of the hole.'
+					'You poke your finger in the hole, letting whoever''s on the other side know that you are ready to serve him.'
+					'The stranger slips ' + iif(ghnow < 5, '300', '150') +	'<b>₽</b> into the hole, and then his erect cock pokes out of it.'
 
 					act 'Suck dick':
 						cla
@@ -895,7 +895,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pip':
 						ghprand = rand(1, 38)
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/gloryhole/gloryhole<<ghprand>>.jpg"></center>'
 						'You take the cock in your mouth and start to suck it, blowing him enthusiastically.'
-						'The stranger''s cock begins to throb, and finally, the stranger cums in your mouth - filling it with a huge amount of thick sperm. You swallow it, and once you''ve licked all the sperm from a his cock, it disappears back into the hole and you hear the man leaves his booth.'
+						'The stranger''s cock begins to throb, and finally, the stranger cums in your mouth, filling it with a huge amount of thick sperm. You swallow it, and once you''ve licked all the sperm from his cock, it disappears back into the hole, and you hear the man leave his booth.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'	
@@ -926,8 +926,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 			*clr & cla
 			kendrano = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend.jpg"></center>'
-			'You smile to her. "Sorry, no. I still don''t belong to anyone."'
-			'She sighs softly. "Such a waste. Oh well, there are plenty of pretty little white Russian bitches that love being owned by an Ebony Mistress. Perhaps we will meet again and you will change your mind. I go to the University on the island, you should stop by sometime." She gives you directions to which dorm building is hers, and which floor and room number is her dorm room. With that you both say your goodbyes and she returns to shopping. As do you.'
+			'You smile at her. "Sorry, no. I still don''t belong to anyone."'
+			'She sighs softly. "Such a waste. Oh well, there are plenty of pretty little white Russian bitches that love being owned by an Ebony Mistress. Perhaps we will meet again and you will change your mind. I go to the University on the island, you should stop by sometime." She gives you directions to which dorm building is hers, and which floor and room number is her dorm room. With that, you both say your goodbyes, and she returns to shopping. As do you.'
 			act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 			act 'Go back to shopping':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 		end
@@ -941,8 +941,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 				kendraslave += 1
 				kendratoy = rand(1,2)
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now, strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes, until you are fully naked. "Good little slave. Now get over her and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. As continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, while Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
-				'"Look at me" commands Kendra. When you look up at her, while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "we''re going to use this, for my pleasure." She informs you.'
+				'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now, strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you are fully naked. "Good little slave. Now get over here and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. You continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
+				'"Look at me," commands Kendra. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this for my pleasure," she informs you.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 				gs 'stat'
 				if kendratoy = 1:
@@ -972,8 +972,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 			*clr & cla
 			kendratoy = rand(1,2)
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes, until you are fully naked. "Good little slave, now get over her and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. You continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
-			'"Look at me" commands Kendra. When you look up at her, while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "we''re going to use this, for my pleasure" she informs you.'
+			'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you are fully naked. "Good little slave, now get over her and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. You continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
+			'"Look at me," commands Kendra. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this for my pleasure," she informs you.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 			if kendratoy = 1:
@@ -987,7 +987,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 		'As you browse the store, you see a very attractive young black woman about your age trying on latex clothes. She notices you at about the same time.'
 		'After a couple of minutes, she walks over and boldly caresses your hair. "You''re a pretty little thing, what''s your name?" she asks.'
 		'You decide to tell her. "My name is <<$pcs_firstname>>, but most people call me <<$pcs_nickname>>. What''s your name?"'
-		'She smiles. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what a pretty name. My name is Kendra, but you can call me Mistress Kendra." She says in confidence.'
+		'She smiles. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what a pretty name. My name is Kendra, but you can call me Mistress Kendra," she says with confidence.'
 		'"Oh" You reply, so she is one of those.'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 		act 'Go back to shopping':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
@@ -995,13 +995,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 			*clr & cla
 			meet_kendra = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend01.jpg"></center>'
-			'You ask her about her clothes, and soon the two of you are talking. You tell her that you live in Pavlovsk, and are in your final year of school. She tells you she is attending the University to get a degree. You find out she is from the Republic of Congo, on a student visa. You talk about a wide range of things for a while. Eventually she says "You are very pretty. I love making pretty little Russian bitches into my slaves. Call me Mistress Kendra, <<$pcs_nickname>>, and become mine." Should you call her mistress? You have no doubt where that will lead.'
+			!! the dialogue here should be different if the player is not attending the school in Pavlovsk
+			'You ask her about her clothes, and soon the two of you are talking. You tell her that you live in Pavlovsk and are in your final year of school. She tells you she is attending the University to get a degree. You find out she is from the Republic of Congo, on a student visa. You talk about a wide range of things for a while. Eventually, she says, "You are very pretty. I love making pretty little Russian bitches into my slaves. Call me Mistress Kendra, <<$pcs_nickname>>, and become mine." Should you call her mistress? You have no doubt where that will lead.'
 			act 'Call her Kendra':
 				*clr & cla
 				kendrano = 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend.jpg"></center>'
-				'You smile to her. "Sorry, but I don''t belong to anyone."'
-				'She sighs softly. "Such a waste. Oh well, there are plenty of pretty little white Russian bitches that love being owned by an Ebony Mistress. Perhaps we will meet again and you will change your mind. I go to the University on the island, you should stop by sometime." She gives you directions to which dorm building is hers, and which floor and room number is her dorm room. With that you both say your goodbyes and she returns to shopping. As do you.'
+				'You smile at her. "Sorry, but I don''t belong to anyone."'
+				'She sighs softly. "Such a waste. Oh well, there are plenty of pretty little white Russian bitches that love being owned by an Ebony Mistress. Perhaps we will meet again and you will change your mind. I go to the University on the island, you should stop by sometime." She gives you directions to which dorm building is hers, and which floor and room number is her dorm room. With that, you both say your goodbyes, and she returns to shopping. As do you.'
 				act 'Go back to shopping':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 			end
 			act 'Call her Mistress Kendra':
@@ -1014,8 +1015,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 					kendraslave += 1
 					kendratoy = rand(1,2)
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes, until you are fully naked. "Good little slave, now get over her and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. You continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
-					'"Look at me" commands Kendra. When you look up at her, while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "we''re going to use this, for my pleasure" she informs you.'
+					'You follow her down into the basement. She sits down on the edge of a table and pulls her fetish clothing aside, exposing her pussy. "Now strip for me, bitch." You do as you are told and begin to slowly strip out of your clothes until you are fully naked. "Good little slave, now get over her and worship my pussy." You kneel before her pussy and lick her eagerly. You continue to lick her pussy and suck on her clit, as Kendra squeals and moans in pleasure.'
+					'"Look at me," commands Kendra. When you look up at her while still eating her out, she pulls her new toy out of her bag. "We''re going to use this for my pleasure," she informs you.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 					gs 'stat'
 					if kendratoy = 1:
@@ -1029,7 +1030,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend0.jpg"></center>'
 		'As you browse the store, you see a very attractive young black woman about your age trying on latex clothes. She notices you at about the same time.'
-		'She gives you a quick once over, and then stops paying attention to you. After a few moments she moves to another section of the store.'
+		'She gives you a quick once over, and then stops paying attention to you. After a few moments, she moves to another section of the store.'
 		act 'Leave': minut += 5 & gt 'city_industrial', 'redlight'
 		act 'Go back to shopping':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 	end
@@ -1042,7 +1043,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra1':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take the dildo from her, and insert it into Kendra''s pussy. While you use one hand to fuck her with the dildo, your other hand caresses her clit, trying to bring her to orgasm. Kendra moans and writhes, sitting on the table, enjoying your efforts.'
+	'You take the dildo from Kendra and insert it into her pussy. While you use one hand to fuck her with the dildo, your other hand caresses her clit, trying to bring her to orgasm. Kendra moans and writhes, sitting on the table, enjoying your efforts.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
@@ -1054,15 +1055,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra1':
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend4.jpg"></center>'
-			'Then Kendra starts spasming, as her whole body orgasms. Her pussy begins to squirt as she orgasms, covering your hand, her thighs and even some of it ends up on your breasts and stomach before her orgasm subsides. Kendra looks at you: "You are my beautiful little white slave bitch, totaly committed to serving me. Now lick me clean" she orders.'
+			'Then Kendra starts spasming, as her whole body orgasms. Her pussy begins to squirt as she orgasms, covering your hand and her thighs. Some of it even ends up on your breasts and stomach before her orgasm subsides. Kendra looks at you. "You are my beautiful little white slave bitch, totally committed to serving me. Now lick me clean," she orders.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo_give', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Lick':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend5.jpg"></center>'
-				'You pull the dildo out of her soaking wet pussy, and dutifully move your head between her legs to begin slowly licking the juices from her thighs and pussy.'
-				'"Keep going, you slut" Kendra orders you. You began to lick faster, licking her thighs and pussy completely clean of her juices.'
-				'"Now, it''s time for your reward" she says as she pulls a strap-on out of her bag next.'
+				'You pull the dildo out of her soaking wet pussy and dutifully move your head between her legs to begin slowly licking the juices from her thighs and pussy.'
+				'"Keep going, you slut," Kendra orders you. You began to lick faster, licking her thighs and pussy completely clean of her juices.'
+				'"Now, it''s time for your reward," she says as she pulls a strap-on out of her bag next.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Yes, Mistress':gt 'sexshop', 'kendra2'
@@ -1078,21 +1079,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendra2':
 	minut += 3
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend8.jpg"></center>'
+	*p 'Kendra steps into the harness and slides it up over her hips. As she does, she starts pulling the straps tight to hold the strap-on firmly in place. With the strap-on harness now securely in place, she pulls you close and kisses you. One of her hands wanders down to your pussy and rubs it for a moment, and then she slides one finger inside of you. She breaks the kiss before saying, '
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
-		'Kendra steps into the harness and slides it up over her hips. As she does, she starts pulling the straps tight to hold the strap-on firmly in place. With the strap-on harness now securely in place, she pulls you close and kisses you. One of her hands wanders down to your pussy and rubs it for a moment, and then she slides one finger inside of you. She breaks the kiss before saying "I see you are still a virgin, well, I won''t pop your cherry. Luckily, you still have other holes I can fuck. Now, on your knees and suck my cock."'
+		'"I see you are still a virgin, well, I won''t pop your cherry. Luckily, you still have other holes I can fuck. Now, on your knees and suck my cock."'
 	else
-		'Kendra steps into the harness and slides it up over her hips. As she does, she starts pulling the straps tight to hold the strap-on firmly in place. With the strap-on harness now securely in place, she pulls you close and kisses you. One of her hands wanders down to your pussy and rubs it for a moment, and then she slides one finger inside of you. She breaks the kiss before saying "I see you are already nice and wet, slave. Eager for my cock, are you? Don''t worry, you will feel it soon enough. Now, on your knees and suck my cock" she commands.'
+		'"I see you are already nice and wet, slave. Eager for my cock, are you? Don''t worry, you will feel it soon enough. Now, on your knees and suck my cock."'
 	end
 	act 'Suck her strap-on':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend7.jpg"></center>'
-		'You kneel down and take ahold of the strap-on dildo with one hand, while wrapping your lips around it. You stroke the dildo while you suck on it at the same time. For several minutes you suck the dildo, getting it nice and wet with your saliva.'
+		'You kneel down and take ahold of the strap-on dildo with one hand while wrapping your lips around it. You stroke the dildo while you suck on it at the same time. For several minutes, you suck the dildo, getting it nice and wet with your saliva.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Deep throat':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend7.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you suck on the dildo, you feel her grab you by the hair. Next thing you know, she forces your head forward, forcing the dildo down your throat. Your lips comes to rest against the fake balls. After a few moments of gagging, she lets you pull back to get a breath through your nose - only for her to force it down your throat again, over and over, as she fucks your throat.'
+			'As you suck on the dildo, you feel Kendra grab you by the hair. Next thing you know, she forces your head forward, forcing the dildo down your throat. Your lips comes to rest against the fake balls. After a few moments of gagging, she lets you pull back to get a breath through your nose - only for her to force it down your throat again, over and over, as she fucks your throat.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 			gs 'stat'
 			if pcs_vag = 0:
@@ -1110,7 +1112,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendravag':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend10.jpg"></center>'
-	'Kendra commands you. "Impale your pussy on my cock, and fuck yourself until I tell you to stop." Once Kendra sits in a chair, you straddle her strap-on, lowering yourself and sliding it into your pussy. You ride the strap-on, and Kendra drives up from under you - trying to shove it as deep into your pussy as possible. Several minutes pass, and each thrust increases your arousal. You decide to rub your clit to increase the amount of pleasure you are recieving.'
+	'Kendra commands you, "Impale your pussy on my cock and fuck yourself until I tell you to stop." Once Kendra sits in a chair, you straddle her strap-on, lowering yourself and sliding it into your pussy. You ride the strap-on, and Kendra drives up from under you - trying to shove it as deep into your pussy as possible. Several minutes pass, and each thrust increases your arousal. You decide to rub your clit to increase the amount of pleasure you are receiving.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Rub clit':
@@ -1133,18 +1135,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 	gs 'boyStat', 'D4'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend9.jpg"></center>'
-	'You stand up, as does she. "Lay on the table" she commands you. You jump up onto the table, and spreads your legs. Kendra steps up between your legs and gently slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> strap-on, slick with your pussy juices, into your asshole. She stops a moment to give your ass time to adjust to the size. Then, she begins to thrust the strap-on up your butt, causing you to moan. Seeing that you are enjoying the process, Kendra begins to slowly accelerate. "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave!" she commands you. You know it likely means she will just fuck you harder if you refuse to submit, but maybe deep down that''s what you really want'
+	'You stand up, as does she. "Lie on the table," she commands you. You jump up onto the table and spread your legs. Kendra steps up between your legs and gently slides the <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> strap-on, slick with your pussy juices, into your asshole. She stops a moment to give your ass time to adjust to the size. Then, she begins to thrust the strap-on up your butt, causing you to moan. Seeing that you are enjoying the process, Kendra begins to slowly accelerate. "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave!" she commands you. You know it likely means she will just fuck you harder if you refuse to submit, but maybe deep down that''s what you really want...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Submit':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend13.jpg"></center>'
-		'You submit to her command, telling her "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
+		'You submit to her command, telling her, "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
 		'She smiles at you as she continues fucking your ass. "That''s right, Slave. And what can I do with it?" she asks.'
 		'You reply to her. "Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!"'
-		'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands'
-		'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
+		'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands.'
+		'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Finish': gt 'sexshop', 'kendrafinish'
@@ -1156,8 +1158,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend13.jpg"></center>'
-			'You decided not to tell her what she wants to hear. "It''s my butt, Mistress Kendra, I just let you fuck it sometimes!" you tell her.'
-			'Just as you expected, she starts fucking you harder and faster. "You will learn your place, Slave! You will submit to me, or I will fuck your ass raw." She explains and for several minutes she just fucks your butt, before ordering you once again. "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave!" You know she will just fuck you harder until you submit, but maybe deep down that''s what you really want...'
+			'You decide not to tell her what she wants to hear. "It''s my butt, Mistress Kendra, I just let you fuck it sometimes!" you tell her.'
+			'Just as you expected, she starts fucking you harder and faster. "You will learn your place, Slave! You will submit to me, or I will fuck your ass raw," she explains, and for several minutes she just fucks your butt, before ordering you once again, "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave!" You know she will just fuck you harder until you submit, but maybe deep down that''s what you really want...'
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Submit':
@@ -1167,8 +1169,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 				'You submit to her command, telling her what she wants to hear before she fucks your asshole raw. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
 				'She smiles at you, pushing your legs together as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, Slave. And what can I do with it?" she asks.'
 				'You reply to her. "Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!"'
-				'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands'
-				'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
+				'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands.'
+				'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finish': gt 'sexshop', 'kendrafinish'
@@ -1180,8 +1182,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend6.jpg"></center>'
-					'You decide to resist again. "No, Mistress Kendra! This is my ass, and I decided who fucks it!" You tell her.'
-					'She starts fucking you even harder and even faster than before. She pushes your legs close, so she can get a better grip on your hips. "Learn your damn place, Slave! You belong to me! You will submit to me now, or else no matter what you say, I will fuck your ass raw right now!" she shouts, and for several minutes she pounds into your asshole, commanding you once again. "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave! Now!" You know she will just fuck you harder until you submit, you doubt you can last until she gets tired. Eventually, your asshole will start to get sore and it will start really hurting. And not in the good way it is now.'
+					'You decide to resist again. "No, Mistress Kendra! This is my ass, and I decide who fucks it!" You tell her.'
+					'She starts fucking you even harder and even faster than before. She pushes your legs close so she can get a better grip on your hips. "Learn your damn place, Slave! You belong to me! You will submit to me now, or else no matter what you say, I will fuck your ass raw right now!" she shouts, and for several minutes, she pounds into your asshole, commanding you once again, "Tell me your ass belongs to me, Slave! Now!" You know she will just fuck you harder until you submit. You doubt you can last until she gets tired. Eventually, your asshole will start to get sore, and it will start really hurting. And not in the good way it is now.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Submit':
@@ -1191,8 +1193,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 						'You finally submit to her command, telling her what she wants to hear before she fucks your asshole raw. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
 						'She smiles at you, pushing your legs together as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, Slave. And what can I do with it?" she asks.'
 						'You reply to her. "Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!"'
-						'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands'
-						'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
+						'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands.'
+						'Despite the pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'Finish': gt 'sexshop', 'kendrafinish'
@@ -1204,8 +1206,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 							gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend14.jpg"></center>'
-							'Still, you refuse and resist her. "No!" Unable to tell her more than a simple no, as it is starting to hurt now.'
-							'She slams it balls deep into your ass, and starts hammering you as hard and fast as she can. "You will learn your place, right this instant, Slave. You will submit to me, now, or I will stay her all day and fuck your ass until you weep and beg me to stop." For several minutes, she pounds into your sore asshole over and over - it is beginning to hurt a lot. "Tell me, right now, your ass belongs to me, Slave!" she commands you. Your ass is starting to hurt, feeling like it is starting to burn. You just can''t take it anymore and you have to give in.'
+							'Though unable to get out more than a simple "No!" against the pain of her endless thrusts, still you refuse and resist her.'
+							'She slams the strap-on balls deep into your ass and starts hammering you as hard and fast as she can. "You will learn your place, right this instant, Slave. You will submit to me, now, or I will stay here all day and fuck your ass until you weep and beg me to stop." For several minutes, she pounds into your sore asshole over and over - it is beginning to hurt a lot. "Tell me, right now, your ass belongs to me, Slave!" she commands you. Your ass is burning. You just can''t take it anymore, and you have to give in.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 							gs 'pain', 1, 'asshole', 'tear'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -1216,8 +1218,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendraanal':
 								'You finally submit to her command as your ass starts to have a burning sensation, telling her what she wants to hear. "My ass belongs to you, Mistress Kendra!"'
 								'She smiles at you as she continues to fuck your asshole. "That''s right, Slave. And what can I do with it?" she asks.'
 								'You reply to her. "Anything you want, Mistress Kendra, I belong to you!"'
-								'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands'
-								'Despite the burning pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
+								'Her smile gets bigger. "That''s right, bitch, your ass belongs to me, and I can fuck it anytime I want. Tell me!" she commands.'
+								'Despite the burning pain, you moan in pleasure as she continues fucking your ass. "My ass belongs to you, and you can fuck it anytime you want, Mistress Kendra!" you scream. She fucks your ass with the strap-on for a couple more minutes, as if to make her point, before she finally pulls it out of you. As she does, she pulls you off the table onto your feet.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 								gs 'pain', 1, 'asshole', 'tear'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -1244,11 +1246,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kendrafinish':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/sex/shkend16.jpg"></center>'
 	'As you stand up, she grabs you by the throat and pulls you close. "Stick out your tongue."'
-	'You do as she says and stick out your tongue. She licks your tongue with hers, and the two of you lick each others'' tongues for a few moments. Finally, she stops and grabs your butt cheek roughly - digging her nails into your backside. Hard enough it hurts a little. Then she lets go and steps away, and the pain quickly fades. She begins taking off her harness. She cleans the dildo, and then puts it away, before getting dressed. Once she is fully dressed, she finally turns to you again. "You may get dressed, Slave."'
+	'You do as she says and stick out your tongue. She joins her tongue with yours, and the two of you kiss for a few moments. Finally, she stops and grabs your butt cheek roughly - digging her nails into your backside hard enough it hurts a little. Then she lets go and steps away, and the pain quickly fades. She begins taking off her harness. She cleans the dildo and then puts it away before getting dressed. Once she is fully dressed, she finally turns to you again. "You may get dressed, Slave."'
 	*nl
-	'"Thank you, Mistress" you tell her, as you get dressed.'
-	'Once you are both fully dressed she says "You should come visit me, I live in the dorms at the University on the island." She gives you directions to which of the dorm buildings is hers, and the floor and room number of her dorm room. "I expect my little white slave to come visit me. Often."'
-	'"Yes, Mistress Kendra" you reply. With that, you leave the basement and go back up to the shop above.'
+	'"Thank you, Mistress," you tell her as you get dressed.'
+	'Once you are both fully dressed, she says, "You should come visit me, I live in the dorms at the University on the island." She gives you directions to which of the dorm buildings is hers and the floor and room number of her dorm room. "I expect my little white slave to come visit me. Often."'
+	'"Yes, Mistress Kendra," you reply. With that, you leave the basement and go back up to the shop above.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'lesbian', 'sub'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1261,7 +1263,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shprod':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/shprod.jpg"></center>'
-	'The cashier is right in front of you, offering to help, and holding a miniskirt. "Girl, this is very you. Will you try it on?"'
+	'The cashier is right in front of you, offering to help and holding a miniskirt. "Girl, this is very you. Will you try it on?"'
 
 	act 'Refuse':gt 'sexshop', 'start'
 
@@ -1269,8 +1271,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shprod':
 		*clr & cla
 		picrand = 47
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/sexshop/shprod1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You wear the skirt out of the booth, and pose in the mirror. You do not have panties on, and the skirt is so short that it looks more like a belt. It does not cover anything.	All your charms are visible, from all directions.'
-		'Approaching the mirror, you are considering this so-called skirt. The cashier kneels behind you and starts praising your ass in that skirt. His hands already wandering around your hips as he get his lips as close to your butt as he can. He says that he wants to "kiss your skin". Words soon cease, and just the feeling of his lips against your skin remain. Closer and closer to your pussy.'
+		'You wear the skirt out of the booth and pose in the mirror. You do not have panties on, and the skirt is so short that it looks more like a belt. It does not cover anything.	Your pussy is fully visible from all directions.'
+		'Approaching the mirror, you consider this so-called skirt. The cashier kneels behind you and starts praising how your ass looks in it, his hands wandering around your hips as he get his lips as close to your butt as he can. He says that he wants to "kiss your skin". Words soon cease, and just the feeling of his lips against your skin remains. Closer and closer to your pussy.'
 		gs 'willpower', 'cuni', 'resist', 'medium'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 			act 'Push him away(<<will_cost>> Willpower)':

locations/shop.qsrc

@@ -36,8 +36,8 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 	end
 
 	'In the hall stands an <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''ATM'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">ATM</a>, from which you can withdraw money from your bank account.'
-	'There is a branch of communication giants <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''megafon'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">MegaFon</a>.'
-	'On the other side is on the wall <a href="exec: gs ''noticeboard'',''start''">Public notice board</a>, where you can check various private and official advertisement.'
+	'There is a branch of communications giant <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''megafon'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">MegaFon</a>.'
+	'On the other side on the wall, there is a <a href="exec: gs ''noticeboard'',''start''">Public notice board</a>, where you can check various private and official advertisement.'
 	'<br>Most of the space in the supermarket is taken up by the <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''grocery'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">grocery department</a>, but the store has many smaller departments as well. <a href="exec:$shoplocation=''cosmetics'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">Cosmetics</a>, <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''hardware'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">hardware</a>, <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''clothing'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">clothing</a> and the department of <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''tech'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">household appliances</a>. Not far from the entrance is a <a href="exec:$shoplocation = ''icecream'' & gt ''shop'', ''move''">counter selling ice cream</a>.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	gs 'themes', 'indoors'
@@ -54,18 +54,18 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 	if $loc = 'city_residential':
 		if rand(1, 20) = 20:
 			if dimaQW = 0:
-				'By the store entrance a man is looking at you appreciatively.'
+				'By the store entrance, a man is looking at you appreciatively.'
 				act 'Return the look':gt 'event', 'dima'
 			elseif dimaQW = 1:
-				'In the lobby of the store you notice Dima and you are frozen with fear, you want to run, but your legs won''t respond.'
-				'Your heart is thumping in your chest, your vision narrows, you feel faint.'
+				'In the lobby of the store, you notice Dima, and you are frozen with fear. You want to run, but your legs won''t respond.'
+				'Your heart thumps in your chest, your vision narrows, you feel faint.'
 				act 'Pass out':gt 'event', 'scoreslut1'
 			else
-				'You meet the same Dima who''s friend fucked and abused you. Dima grins confidently and says, "Hello."'
+				'You meet the same Dima whose friend fucked and abused you. Dima grins confidently and says, "Hello."'
 
 				act 'Hello':
 					cla
-					'"Come with me, My wife''s away", says Dima.'
+					'"Come with me. My wife''s away," says Dima.'
 					
 					gs 'willpower', 'sex', 'resist'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -87,9 +87,9 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 							spafinloc = 12
 							gs 'cum_manage'
 							swallow += 1
-							'Dima takes you to his house and orders you to lie across the sofa. You get on into position, he calls you a bitch and a starts fucking you in the mouth.'
+							'Dima takes you to his house and orders you to lie across the sofa. You get into position. He calls you a bitch and starts fucking you in the mouth.'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/street/sex/gostdt2.jpg"></center>'
-							'Dima finally finishes in your mouth, you obediently swallow and lick the remnants of sperm off his big cock.'
+							'Dima finally finishes in your mouth. You obediently swallow and lick the remnants of sperm off his big cock.'
 							
 							gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'deepthroat', 'humiliation'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -102,10 +102,10 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 							spafinloc = 4
 							gs 'cum_manage'
 							spank += 1
-							'Dima has brings you to his house and right in the corridor begins to kiss and undress you. When you are naked he takes you to the bathroom.'
-							'There he unscrews the shower-head and puts the hose in your ass. Quickly you feel the fullness and Dima sits you on the toilet. After the rough enema, he bends you over and puts his big dick in your ass.'
+							'Dima brings you to his house and, right in the corridor, begins to kiss and undress you. When you are naked, he takes you to the bathroom.'
+							'There, he unscrews the shower-head and puts the hose in your ass. Quickly, you feel the fullness and Dima sits you on the toilet. After the rough enema, he bends you over and puts his big dick in your ass.'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/street/sex/gostanal2.jpg"></center>'
-							'Dima fucks you in the ass whilst slapping your butt, at first it is painful, but gradually you get it and it feels amazing. Finally, your ass fills with hot liquid and Dima moans and grabs your buttocks.'
+							'Dima fucks you in the ass whilst slapping your butt. At first it is painful, but gradually, you get into it, and it feels amazing. Finally, your ass fills with hot liquid, and Dima moans and grabs your buttocks.'
 							
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal', 30, 'sub', 'rough', 'humiliation'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -125,7 +125,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 	if TorgPredZ > 0:
 		!! the location of the shop hasn''t been done today
 		if ($loc = 'city_residential' and StreetShopTPday ! daystart) or ($loc = 'city_industrial' and nordShopTPday ! daystart) or ($loc = 'torgcentr' and downShopTPday ! daystart):
-			act 'Arrange products':
+			act 'Promote products':
 				*clr & cla
 				if $loc = 'city_residential':StreetShopTPday = daystart
 				if $loc = 'city_industrial':nordShopTPday = daystart
@@ -137,7 +137,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'main':
 				TorgPredZV += 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/store/shop.jpg"></center>'
-				'You arranged the products for quite a while and when I finally managed, then went to the cashier and you check it struck.'
+				'You promote the products for quite a while, and when you finally finish, you go to the cashier and confirm they sold.'
 
 				act 'Exit':gt 'shop', 'start'
 			end
@@ -169,14 +169,14 @@ if $shoplocation = 'ATM':
 				cla
 				minut += 5
 
-				kartaINATM = input ("How much money you want to deposit into the account? Note: A service charge of 100 <b>₽</b> will be deducted from the amount deposited.")
+				kartaINATM = input ("How much money do you want to deposit into the account? Note: A service charge of 100 <b>₽</b> will be deducted from the amount deposited.")
 				if kartaINATM < 100 or kartaINATM > money:
 					'This is not a valid input.'
 				else
 					atmDeposit += kartaINATM - 100
 					atmDepositDate = daystart + 2
 					money -= kartaINATM
-					'<br>You deposited <<kartaINATM>> <b>₽</b> into your account.'
+					'<br>You deposit <<kartaINATM>> <b>₽</b> into your account.'
 					'It will take 2 days for funds to be available. Your new balance will be <<karta+atmDeposit>> <b>₽</b>.'
 				end
 
@@ -192,7 +192,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'ATM':
 				cla
 				minut += 5
 
-				kartaOUT = input ("How much money you want to withdraw?")
+				kartaOUT = input ("How much money do you want to withdraw?")
 				if kartaOUT <= 0 or kartaOUT > karta + bankDebtLimit:
 					'<br>Invalid operation.'
 				else
@@ -349,7 +349,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'clothing':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Department of Women''s Clothing</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/store/shop4.jpg"></center>'
-	'This department is mostly cheap underwear, they also have an ugly coat and one style of mumsy swimwwear.'
+	'This department is mostly cheap underwear. They also have an ugly coat and one style of mumsy swimwwear.'
 	'It is the only place you can buy ice-skates though.'
 
 	if hour < 8 or hour > 20:
@@ -517,7 +517,7 @@ if $shoplocation = 'icecream':
 			pcs_breath = 0
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/food/icecreem.jpg"></center>'
-			'You bought ice cream and ate it not going far.'
+			'You buy ice cream and eat it not going far.'
 			act 'Move away from the counter':gt 'shop', 'start'
 		end
 	end

locations/shop_dolls.qsrc

@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/dolls/dolls.jpg"></center>'
 	''
-	'The store has a small front on a side street but one glance is all you need to tell this is not your average clothing store. Inside the store, shelves and racks of alternative clothes crammed into every available space - anybody setting out to find an inch of wall would have their work cut out for them. The checkout counter is near the entrance.'
+	'The store has a small front on a side street, but one glance is all you need to tell this is not your average clothing store. Inside the store, shelves and racks of alternative clothes are crammed into every available space - anybody setting out to find an inch of wall would have their work cut out for them. The checkout counter is near the entrance.'
 	if doll_staff_day ! daystart:
 		if rand(0,1) = 0:
 			doll_staff = 0
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'browse':
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/dolls/dollsshop.jpg"></center>'
 	''
-	'The store has a small front on a side street but one glance is all you need to tell this is not your average clothing store. Inside the store, shelves and racks of alternative clothes crammed into every available space - anybody setting out to find an inch of wall would have their work cut out for them. The checkout counter is near the entrance.'
+	'The store has a small front on a side street, but one glance is all you need to tell this is not your average clothing store. Inside the store, shelves and racks of alternative clothes are crammed into every available space - anybody setting out to find an inch of wall would have their work cut out for them. The checkout counter is near the entrance.'
 
 	act 'View dresses':gt 'shop_dolls', 'dress'
 	act 'View other outfits':gt 'shop_dolls', 'clothing'
@@ -233,7 +233,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'savva':
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/savva/savva.jpg"></center>'
 	if know_Savva = 0:
-		'At the counter you see a young man; he looks about your sister''s age but he has a shy, quiet, almost girlish quality about him. As you approach the counter, he quietly asks if you need help, so softly you can barely hear him. "Can I help you?"'
+		'At the counter, you see a young man; he looks about your sister''s age, but he has a shy, quiet, almost girlish quality about him. As you approach the counter, he quietly asks, so softly you can barely hear him, "Can I help you?"'
 	else
 		'Savva is working the counter today. As you walk up, he gives you a friendly smile. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, nice to see you again. What can I help you with?"'
 	end
@@ -242,7 +242,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'savva':
 		npc_rel['A204'] += 2
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/savva/savva.jpg"></center>'
-		'You ask him about the shop. He tells you it opened a few years ago and they mostly cater to the college kids. Occasionally they get hassled by the local gopniks or police, but he likes the job. Then asks if you need help finding an outfit.'
+		'You ask him about the shop. He tells you it opened a few years ago and they mostly cater to the college kids. Occasionally they get hassled by the local gopniks or police, but he likes the job. Then he asks if you need help finding an outfit.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'shop_dolls', 'savva'
 	end
 !!this only shows up as an option if Anushka sent Sveta to the store from one of her chat options in Anushka file or anushapt file.
@@ -252,13 +252,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'savva':
 			npc_rel['A204'] += 3
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/savva/savva.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Anushka, a friend of mine, sent me." you tell him with a smile.'
+			'"Anushka, a friend of mine, sent me," you tell him with a smile.'
 			'He laughs a bit. "Well you must lead a real interesting life then if she is your friend. So you from Pavlovsk too?"'
 			'You nod a bit. "Yeah, we go to school together actually."'
 			'He nods a bit. "Cool, I still find it hard to believe that a girl like that has good enough grades to go to the University. Guess when that happens, I''ll see a lot more of her."'
 			*nl
 			'"She is a wild one, that''s for sure. Anyways, she told me you could help and that you ''owe her one.''"'
-			'He snorts and shakes his head. "She must be failing math since she doesn''t seem to know how to count. But she''s pretty cool and if she sent you, then you have to be ok. So what''s your name?" You tell him your name and he types out a few things on the computer and a few moments later, you hear the sound of something printing. Then he hands over a card. "Here is a VIP customer card, good for ten percent off anything in the store. Now you can tell her she owes me, like I am ever likely to collect." he says with a laugh.'
+			'He snorts and shakes his head. "She must be failing math since she doesn''t seem to know how to count. But she''s pretty cool, and if she sent you, then you have to be ok. So what''s your name?" You tell him your name, and he types out a few things on the computer. A few moments later, you hear the sound of something printing. Then he hands over a card. "Here is a VIP customer card, good for ten percent off anything in the store. Now you can tell her she owes me, like I am ever likely to collect," he says with a laugh.'
 	!!can this be coded so Sveta gets a discount on all items here after this conversation.
 			act 'Continue': gt 'shop_dolls', 'savva'
 		end
@@ -289,7 +289,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'viola':
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/viola/viola.jpg"></center>'
 	if know_Viola = 0:
-		'At the counter you see a young woman, maybe as old as your sister or a year or two older. She is reading a magazine when you walk up, only glancing up at you as you stop at the counter. "How can I help you?"'
+		'At the counter, you see a young woman, maybe as old as your sister or a year or two older. She is reading a magazine when you walk up, only glancing up at you as you stop at the counter. "How can I help you?"'
 	else
 		'"What''s up, <<$pcs_nickname>>? You here to do a little shopping or to kill some time?"'
 	end
@@ -298,7 +298,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'viola':
 		cla
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/viola/viola.jpg"></center>'
-		'You ask her about the shop. She tells you the place is only a few years old and is about the only place to buy a decent outfit in the whole city; unless you are willing to shop online, that is, which leads her to talking about the woes of online shopping where clothes don''t fit and never seem to have anywhere near as good a quality as they seem to on the pictures. You get the impression that the topic really bothers her and she could go on for some time if you let her.'
+		'You ask her about the shop. She tells you the place is only a few years old and is about the only place to buy a decent outfit in the whole city; unless you are willing to shop online, that is, which leads her to talking about the woes of online shopping where clothes don''t fit and never seem to have anywhere near as good a quality as they seem to in the pictures. You get the impression that the topic really bothers her and she could go on for some time if you let her.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'shop_dolls', 'viola'
 	end
 !!this only shows up as an option if Anushka sent Sveta to the store from one of her chat options in Anushka file or anushapt file.
@@ -309,12 +309,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'viola':
 			npc_rel['A205'] += 5
 			'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/viola/viola.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Anushka, a friend of mine, sent me." you tell her with a smile.'
+			'"Anushka, a friend of mine, sent me," you tell her with a smile.'
 			'Viola perks up a bit at the mention of Anushka. "Oh? You''re friends with Nush? Why didn''t you say so? How is she doing? Raising hell and having fun if I know her."'
 			*nl
-			'You can''t help but grin a little. If you are not mistaken, Viola has a thing for Anushka. "She''s good, I was asking her about her clothes. You know she has such good tastes. I asked her where she got them and she said you guys could help me out. Oh and she said to tell you that you ''owe her one'' or something like that."'
+			'You can''t help but grin a little. If you are not mistaken, Viola has a thing for Anushka. "She''s good, I was asking her about her clothes. You know she has such good tastes. I asked her where she got them, and she said you guys could help me out. Oh and she said to tell you that you ''owe her one'' or something like that."'
 			*nl
-			'Viola laughs at that last bit. "I seem to always be owing her, not sure how math works in her head. But if she sent you, then you are in good hands. What''s your name?" You tell her your name and she types out a few things on the computer and a few moments later, you hear the sound of something printing. Then she hands over a card. "Here is a VIP customer card, good for ten percent off anything in the store. Now you can tell her she owes me." Viola says with a wink.'
+			'Viola laughs at that last bit. "I seem to always be owing her, not sure how math works in her head. But if she sent you, then you are in good hands. What''s your name?" You tell her your name, and she types out a few things on the computer. A few moments later, you hear the sound of something printing. Then she hands over a card. "Here is a VIP customer card, good for ten percent off anything in the store. Now you can tell her she owes me," Viola says with a wink.'
 	!!can this be coded so Sveta gets a discount on all items here after this conversation.
 			act 'Continue': gt 'shop_dolls', 'viola'
 		end
@@ -324,7 +324,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'viola':
 		npc_rel['A205'] += 3
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/viola/viola.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you talk to her, you start flirting and she returns the favor to a point, occasionally touching your hand or shoulder, laughing at some of the things you say... but she never fully commits to flirting with you; either she''s playing hard to get, trying to put you in a good mood to buy stuff, or she is messing with you - you are unsure which one it is.'
+		'As you talk to her, you start flirting, and she returns the favor to a point, occasionally touching your hand or shoulder, laughing at some of the things you say... but she never fully commits to flirting with you; she''s either playing hard to get, trying to put you in a good mood to buy stuff, or messing with you - you are unsure which one it is.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'shop_dolls', 'viola'
 	end
 	act 'Chat with her':
@@ -334,7 +334,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'viola':
 		npc_rel['A205'] += 2
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Patch Work Dolls</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/viola/viola.jpg"></center>'
-		'You decide to chat with her and the two of you talk about a variety of topics. She seems happy to talk with you, especially about fashion, techniques on dying your hair, music, and the injustices of life. She mentions how the gopniks hassle some of the gay boys that shop here and some time passes, before you decide to do something else.'
+		'You decide to chat with her, and the two of you talk about a variety of topics. She seems happy to talk with you, especially about fashion, techniques for dyeing your hair, music, and the injustices of life. She mentions how the gopniks hassle some of the gay boys that shop here, and some time passes before you decide to do something else.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'shop_dolls', 'viola'
 	end
 	act 'Return': gt 'shop_dolls', 'start'

locations/shop_fashionista.qsrc

@@ -46,7 +46,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'changingroom':
 	
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/fashionista/changingroom.jpg"</center>'
-	'As you walk through the store you notice that there''s nobody in the changing rooms. Feeling a bit bored you go look at some clothes and grab several items to try on before heading into one of the changing rooms.'
+	'As you walk through the store you notice that there''s nobody in the changing rooms. Feeling a bit bored, you go look at some clothes and grab several items to try on before heading into one of the changing rooms.'
 	
 	if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 		act 'Try on clothes': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'dressingclothes'
@@ -54,7 +54,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'changingroom':
 			if NatbelQW['seethrough'] = 0 and NatbelQW['QWstage'] > 5 and NatbelQW['underwearShop'] = 0:
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/fashionista/nude.jpg"</center>'
-				'As you try on a particularly spicy set of seethrough underwear you notice that it doesn''t quite fit you.'
+				'As you try on a particularly spicy set of see-through underwear, you notice that it doesn''t quite fit you.'
 				'"This should fit Natasha perfectly though. And it only costs 750 <b>₽</b>." You think to yourself, imagining the look on her face if you make her wear it.'
 				act 'Buy it':
 					*clr & cla
@@ -62,7 +62,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'changingroom':
 					'You put the underwear aside for now so that you can take it to the register with you.'
 					money -= 750
 					NatbelQW['seethrough'] = 1
-					act 'Stay in the changingroom': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
+					act 'Stay in the changing room': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
 					act 'Get dressed and go back to the store': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingend'
 				end			
 				act 'Don''t buy it':
@@ -70,7 +70,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'changingroom':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/fashionista/nude.jpg"</center>'
 					'Deciding against it, you look through the rest of the underwear for something that would fit you better.'
 					NatbelQW['underwearShop'] = 1
-					act 'Stay in the changingroom': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
+					act 'Stay in the changing room': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
 					act 'Get dressed and go back to the store': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingend'
 				end
 			else
@@ -91,7 +91,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'changingroom':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/fashionista/dressed.jpg"</center>'
 			gs 'clothing', 'wear_last_worn'
-			act 'Stay in the changingroom': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
+			act 'Stay in the changing room': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
 			act 'Get dressed and go back to the store': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingend'
 		end
 	end
@@ -100,7 +100,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'changingroom':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/fashionista/underwear.jpg"</center>'
 			gs 'clothing', 'strip'
-			act 'Stay in the changingroom': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
+			act 'Stay in the changing room': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
 			act 'Get dressed and go back to the store': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingend'
 		end
 	end
@@ -109,7 +109,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'changingroom':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/fashionista/underwear.jpg"</center>'
 			gs 'underwear', 'wear'
-			act 'Stay in the changingroom': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
+			act 'Stay in the changing room': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
 			act 'Get dressed and go back to the store': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingend'
 		end
 	end
@@ -119,7 +119,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'changingroom':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/fashionista/nude.jpg"</center>'
 			gs 'clothing', 'strip'
 			gs 'underwear', 'remove'
-			act 'Stay in the changingroom': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
+			act 'Stay in the changing room': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingroom'
 			act 'Get dressed and go back to the store': gt 'shop_fashionista', 'changingend'
 		end
 	end

locations/shopdacha.qsrc

@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ gs 'stat'
 gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 '<center><b><font color="maroon">Ilyich and Biryukov construction</font></b></center>'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/store/shopdacha.jpg"></center>'
-'In this storefront office you can upgrade your existing properties, or start a new construction project upon any land you may own.'
+'In this storefront office, you can upgrade your existing properties or start a new construction project upon any land you may own.'
 'All payments must be made from you bank account. Current balance - <<karta>> <b>₽</b>.'
 
 act 'Leave': minut += 3 & gt 'torgcentr'
@@ -20,7 +20,7 @@ else
 				if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 50000:
 					rembedr = 1
 					karta -= 50000
-					'You have upgraded your apartment bedroom'
+					'You upgrade your apartment bedroom.'
 				else
 					'Unfortunately, you do not have enough money in your bank account.'
 				end
@@ -35,7 +35,7 @@ else
 				if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 50000:
 					remsitr = 1
 					karta -= 50000
-					'You have upgraded your apartment living room'
+					'You upgrade your apartment living room.'
 				else
 					'Unfortunately, you do not have enough money in your bank account.'
 				end
@@ -50,7 +50,7 @@ else
 				if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 50000:
 					remkorr = 1
 					karta -= 50000
-					'You have upgraded your apartment hallway'
+					'You upgrade your apartment hallway.'
 				else
 					'Unfortunately, you do not have enough money in your bank account.'
 				end
@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ else
 				if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 50000:
 					remvanr = 1
 					karta -= 50000
-					'You have upgraded your apartment bathroom'
+					'You upgrade your apartment bathroom.'
 				else
 					'Unfortunately, you do not have enough money in your bank account.'
 				end
@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ else
 				if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 50000:
 					remkuhr = 1
 					karta -= 50000
-					'You have upgraded your apartment kitchen'
+					'You upgrade your apartment kitchen.'
 				else
 					'Unfortunately, you do not have enough money in your bank account.'
 				end
@@ -96,7 +96,7 @@ else
 			home_owned[3] = 2
 			minut += 15
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You upgraded you dacha in the cooperative.'
+			'You upgrade you dacha in the cooperative.'
 			act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 		end
 	end
@@ -108,20 +108,20 @@ else
 			home_owned[5] = 2
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You paid for a connection of services to the site.'
+			'You pay for a connection of services to the site.'
 
 			act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 		end
 	end
 
 	if karta + bankDebtLimit >= 1500000 and home_owned[5] = 2:
-		act 'Build Mansion''s shell for (1,500,000 <b>₽</b>)':
+		act 'Build mansion''s shell for (1,500,000 <b>₽</b>)':
 			cls
 			karta -= 1500000
 			home_owned[5] = 3
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You paid for the construction of the Mansion''s shell.'
+			'You pay for the construction of the mansion''s shell.'
 
 			act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 		end
@@ -134,7 +134,7 @@ else
 			ymanrem[3] = 1
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You paid for the construction of the Mansion''s internal walls.'
+			'You pay for the construction of the mansion''s internal walls.'
 
 			act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 		end
@@ -148,7 +148,7 @@ else
 				banaMansion = 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You paid for the electrics and plumbing to be installed.'
+				'You pay for the electrics and plumbing to be installed.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -161,7 +161,7 @@ else
 				bassMansion = 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You paid for the construction of the Mansion''s pool.'
+				'You pay for the construction of the mansion''s pool.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -186,7 +186,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[3] = 3
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You bought lounge furniture.'
+				'You buy lounge furniture.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -210,7 +210,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[4] = 2
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You bought bedroom furniture.'
+				'You buy bedroom furniture.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -295,7 +295,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[8] = 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You pay for your lounge'
+				'You pay for your lounge.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -319,7 +319,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[9] = 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You pay for a children''s room'
+				'You pay for a children''s room.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -330,7 +330,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[9] = 2
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You paid furniture for the nursery.'
+				'You pay furniture for the nursery.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -343,7 +343,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[10] = 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You pay for a library'
+				'You pay for a library.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -354,7 +354,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[10] = 2
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You bought furniture for the library.'
+				'You buy furniture for the library.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -367,7 +367,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[11] = 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You bought a gym.'
+				'You buy a gym.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -378,7 +378,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[11] = 2
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You bought gym equipment.'
+				'You buy gym equipment.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end
@@ -402,7 +402,7 @@ else
 				ymanrem[12] = 2
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You bought office furniture.'
+				'You buy office furniture.'
 
 				act 'Return': gt 'shopdacha'
 			end

locations/shoplifting.qsrc

@@ -15,15 +15,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'city':
 		picrand = rand(0,7)
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/steal<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'Standing in front make-up section of the supermarket. You nervously look over your shoulder to make sure none of the employees are able to spot you.'
+		'Standing in front of the make-up section of the supermarket, you nervously look over your shoulder to make sure none of the employees are able to spot you.'
 		'Seeing no one, you casually reach out for the make-up you usually use and tuck it away...'
-		'After looking around the cosmetic section for a while more you decide it''s time to make your escape.'
+		'After looking around the cosmetic section for a while more, you decide it''s time to make your escape.'
 
 		act 'Leave the store':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/leave.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Okay <<$pcs_nickname>>, just act normal..." you sigh quietly as you step towards the exit, trying to not draw any attention towards you.'
+			'"Okay <<$pcs_nickname>>, just act normal..." you sigh quietly as you step towards the exit, trying to not draw any attention towards yourself.'
 			'Don''t panic...'
 			'Walk casually...'
 			'Almost there...'
@@ -35,10 +35,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'city':
 			if ((pcs_observ+pcs_persuas > 50) and (hour = 12 or hour = 17)) or pcs_observ+pcs_persuas > 150 or rand(0,4) > 0:
 				!if observation and persuasion = sufficient: and certain time of the day (when the store is full with people)
 				kosmetica += 50
-				'As you walk by the counters and leave the supermarket you feel a rush of excitement. You''re almost there now, feeling relieved as well as triumphant. You''re going to make it, for sure!'
+				'As you walk by the counters and leave the supermarket, you feel a rush of excitement. You''re almost there now, feeling relieved as well as triumphant. You''re going to make it for sure!'
 				'You feel your hands trembling in your pockets, getting worse with every step. No matter what you do, you can''t shake the feeling that someone must''ve spotted you... surely they''ve spotted you!'
-				'You desperately try to calm yourself down with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you, so far... maybe you got lucky?'
-				'Before you know it you''re standing outside, having managed to get away with all kinds of loot. You turn back one last time to make sure that no one is following you.'
+				'You desperately try to calm yourself down as with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you so far... maybe you got lucky?'
+				'Before you know it, you''re standing outside, having managed to get away with your loot. You turn back one last time to make sure that no one is following you.'
 
 				act 'Keep on walking':gt 'torgcentr'
 
@@ -46,15 +46,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'city':
 				!elseif observation, persuasion and running level = sufficient and certain time of day (less people around):
 				!ADD COOLDOWN ON ATTEMPT TO STEAL, TWO WEEKS
 				'You feel your hands trembling in your pockets, getting worse with every step. No matter what you do, you can''t shake the feeling that someone must''ve spotted you... surely they''ve spotted you!'
-				'You desperately try to calm yourself down with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you, so far... maybe you got lucky?'
-				'You nervously look around making sure there isn''t anyone following you as you pass the counter. All of a sudden you see a guard appear and is walking towards you...'
+				'You desperately try to calm yourself down as with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you so far... maybe you got lucky?'
+				'You nervously look around, making sure there isn''t anyone following you as you pass the counter. All of a sudden, you see a guard appear and walk towards you...'
 
 				act 'Try to escape':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 10
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/running.jpg"></center>'
-					'Realizing he''s out after you, and not wanting to get caught you make a dash for it. You can''t get caught for a small thing like this.'
+					'Realizing he''s out after you and not wanting to get caught, you make a dash for it. You can''t get caught for a small thing like this.'
 
 					if pcs_run > 70:
 						!if running skills are over a certain level, higher than the first check
@@ -62,26 +62,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'city':
 						run_exp += 5
 						!Boost the stats observation and running by 1
 						kosmetica += 50
-						'You keep running while the security guard is closely following you... You turn a corner and then quickly take another corner as you try to shake him off...'
-						'The guard is not easily giving up but after a few minutes you''ve managed to outrun him as you make your escape from the supermarket. You can hear the guard screaming behind you...'
+						'You keep running while the security guard follows close behind... You turn a corner and then quickly take another corner as you try to shake him off...'
+						'The guard is not easily giving up, but after a few minutes, you''ve managed to outrun him as you make your escape from the supermarket. You can hear the guard screaming behind you...'
 
 						act 'Catch your breath':gt 'city_center'
 
 					else
 						shlif_caught += 1
 						!ADD 1 TO THE CAUGHT COUNTER
-						'You keep running while the security guard is closely following you... You turn a corner and then quickly take another corner as you try to shake him off...'
-						'But the guard is not easily giving up and as you turn the corner you reach a dead-end. You quickly try to turn around and run another way but it''s too late as you''re tackled.'
-						'Laying on the ground the security guard quickly lifts you up and leads you toward the security room.'
+						'You keep running while the security guard follows close behind... You turn a corner and then quickly take another corner as you try to shake him off...'
+						'But the guard is not easily giving up, and as you turn the corner, you reach a dead-end. You quickly try to turn around and run another way but it''s too late as you''re tackled.'
+						'Lying on the ground, the security guard quickly lifts you up and leads you toward the security room.'
 
 						act 'Get lead to the security room':gt 'shoplifting', 'securityroom'
 					end
 				end
 			else
 				'You feel your hands trembling in your pockets, getting worse with every step. No matter what you do, you can''t shake the feeling that someone must''ve spotted you... surely they''ve spotted you!'
-				'You desperately try to calm yourself down with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you, so far... maybe you got lucky?'
-				'You pass by the counter and seeing no one reacting you relax for a bit and let down your guard. Just as you''re about to leave through the entrance you feel a hand grab you by the shoulder.'
-				'You instantly turn around seeing a security guard is holding you and drags you back inside. Before you''re even able to speak up he is forcefully leading back to his office.'
+				'You desperately try to calm yourself down as with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you so far... maybe you got lucky?'
+				'You pass by the counter, and seeing no one reacting, you relax for a bit and let down your guard. Just as you''re about to leave through the entrance, you feel a hand grab you by the shoulder.'
+				'You instantly turn around, seeing a security guard is holding you and dragging you back inside. Before you''re even able to speak up, he is forcefully leading you back to his office.'
 
 				act 'Get dragged into the back room':gt 'shoplifting', 'securityroom'
 			end
@@ -101,23 +101,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'securityroom':
 	shplft_value = 1300
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/caught.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Where are you taking me?" you shout out, "I haven''t done anything wrong!" you look around trying to catch someone''s attention. People are staring at you in disgust and turning their heads.'
-	'The security guard is keeping quiet as he forcefully pushes you away from the supermarket. You go through a dark hallway and stop at a door which he locks up and pushes you inside the room.'
-	'He orders you to take a seat on a basic chair and you quietly comply...'
-	'He sits down next to you and lets out a deep sigh, "You might as well admit we have you on tape that you''ve stolen..."'
+	'"Where are you taking me?" you shout out, "I haven''t done anything wrong!" You look around trying to catch someone''s attention. People are staring at you in disgust and turning their heads.'
+	'The security guard keeps quiet as he forcefully pushes you away from the supermarket. You go through a dark hallway and stop at a door, which he unlocks before pushing you inside.'
+	'He orders you to take a seat on a basic chair, and you quietly comply...'
+	'He sits down next to you and lets out a deep sigh, "You might as well admit what you''ve done. We have you on tape stealing..."'
 
 	act 'Admit':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You hang your head in discouragement that you''ve been caught. Your eyes tear up with crocodile tears as you try to come up with a way to get out of it, "I admit I''ve stolen..."'
-		'The guard clears his throat, "Well, that''s a start... Now I just need to go and have a talk to the store manager on how we''ll deal with you..."'
-		'Pleadingly you look at him, "Can''t we work something out? Do you really have to go and talk to the manager?"'
-		'Looking at you the security guard starts pondering and after a short moment he speaks up, "So what would you be able to offer me?"'
+		'You hang your head in resignation, realizing there''s no denying that you''ve been caught. Your eyes tear up with crocodile tears as you try to come up with a way to get out of this, "I admit I''ve stolen..."'
+		'The guard clears his throat, "Well, that''s a start... Now I just need to go and have a talk with the store manager on how we''ll deal with you..."'
+		'Pleadingly, you look at him, "Can''t we work something out? Do you really have to go and talk to the manager?"'
+		'Looking at you, the security guard starts pondering, and after a short moment, he speaks up, "So what would you be able to offer me?"'
 
 		act 'Masturbate for him': gt 'shoplifting', 'show'
 		act 'Offer him relief': gt 'shoplifting', 'bj'
-		if pcs_money >= 5000: act 'Offer a bribe (5000<b>₽</b>)': gt 'shoplifting', 'bribe'
+		if pcs_money >= 5000: act 'Offer a bribe (5000 <b>₽</b>)': gt 'shoplifting', 'bribe'
 		act 'Keep quiet': gt 'shoplifting', 'quiet'
 	end
 
@@ -128,16 +128,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'securityroom':
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You defyingly tell him that he''s grabbed the wrong person and that you have no idea what he''s talking about.'
-			'"Listen here, girl. We''ve got you on tape as you''ve shoplifted..." he proudly boasts.'
-			'You know you''ve been caught buy you keep on sticking to you story, "That can be whoever on that tape, how can you prove that''s me?"'
-			'The security guard chuckles, "Don''t worry about that. I''ll go and get the manager and then we''ll see what he decides to do with you..."'
+			'You defiantly tell him that he''s grabbed the wrong person and that you have no idea what he''s talking about.'
+			'"Listen here, girl. We''ve got you on tape as you shoplifted..." he proudly boasts.'
+			'You know you''ve been caught, but you keep on sticking to you story, "That could be whoever on that tape, how can you prove that''s me?"'
+			'The security guard chuckles, "Don''t worry about that. I''ll go and get the manager, and then we''ll see what he decides to do with you..."'
 			'"Wait!" you squeal, "We don''t need to get him involved..."'
 			'The security guard crosses his hands, "So what possibly could you offer me?"'
 
 			act 'Masturbate for him': gt 'shoplifting', 'show'
 			act 'Offer him relief': gt 'shoplifting', 'bj'
-			if pcs_money >= 5000: act 'Offer a bribe (5000<b>₽</b>)': gt 'shoplifting', 'bribe'
+			if pcs_money >= 5000: act 'Offer a bribe (5000 <b>₽</b>)': gt 'shoplifting', 'bribe'
 			act 'Keep quiet': gt 'shoplifting', 'quiet'
 		end
 	else
@@ -152,8 +152,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show1.jpg"></center>'
 	'"How about a little show? I''ll help you get off, and you can even direct me on how the show will carry on..." you desperately proclaim.'
 	'The security guard stops, pondering about it for a moment... All of a sudden you can see him smirking, "And you''ll follow my instructions to the latter?"'
-	'You nod and slyly smile giving into the fantasy that you''re going to be entirely subdued by him...'
-	'"Fine, let''s begin then." he excitingly exclaims, "Stand up and let me take a look at you. I want you to tease yourself for a while, I love seeing girls getting off."'
+	'You nod and slyly smile, giving into the fantasy that you''re going to be entirely subdued by him...'
+	'"Fine, let''s begin then," he excitingly exclaims, "Stand up and let me take a look at you. I want you to tease yourself for a while, I love seeing girls getting off."'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -162,9 +162,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You comply and stand up, pressed against the wall, he begins grabbing your clothes wanting to remove them. While he''s doing this you hear him say, "I want you to touch yourself." You prepare yourself by taking a deep breath and slowly slide down your hand towards your panties. As you finally reach the clit, you slowly begin touching it, biting your lip as your body reacts to the soft touches.'
-		'The security guard is satisfyingly observing you, rubbing his cock throughout his pants. He''s clearly aroused and you fear a bit what might come next, but you manage to keep focus as you know this will seal your faith.'
-		'"Wonder if your panties are soaked yet, girl?" he asks.'
+		'You comply and stand up, pressing yourself against the wall. He begins grabbing your clothes, wanting to remove them. While he''s doing this, you hear him say, "I want you to touch yourself." You prepare yourself by taking a deep breath and slowly slide your hand down towards your panties. As you finally reach your clit, you slowly begin touching it, biting your lip as your body reacts to the soft touches.'
+		'The security guard is observing you satisfied, rubbing his cock throughout his pants. He''s clearly aroused, and you fear a bit what might come next, but you manage to keep focus as you know this will determine your fate.'
+		'"I wonder, are your panties soaked yet, girl?" he asks.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -173,9 +173,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You answer occurs in a gentle nod and a soft moan letting him know that his orders has succeeded making you wet.'
-			'Pleased, he nods his head as he continues on, "Remove your clothing I want to see them wet panties."'
-			'Once again you comply and remove you clothing piece by piece as he carefully scans your body, "Good, now sit back down again and spread your legs, slide your panties down I want to see that vulva exposed..."'
+			'Your answer comes as a gentle nod and a soft moan letting him know that his orders has succeeded in making you wet.'
+			'Pleased, he nods his head as he continues on, "Remove your clothing, I want to see them wet panties."'
+			'Once again, you comply and remove you clothing piece by piece as he carefully scans your body, "Good, now sit back down again and spread your legs, slide your panties down, I want to see that vulva exposed..."'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -186,7 +186,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show4.jpg"></center>'
 				'"I hate you..." you whisper softly as you obey.'
 				'He starts chuckling, "Good, I want you to hate me, this is making you feel humiliated. Use that frustration to begin touching yourself and pick up the pace this time."'
-				'You look madly at him as you use your fingers to rub on your exposed clit, picking up the pace. Just as you''re feeling excited he tells you to slow down as he doesn''t want you to get too much pleasure out of this...'
+				'You look madly at him as you use your fingers to rub on your exposed clit, picking up the pace. Just as you''re feeling excited, he tells you to slow down as he doesn''t want you to get too much pleasure out of this...'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -195,9 +195,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show5.jpg"></center>'
-					'By the time you''ve gradually slowed down, the security guard himself has started jerking off as he''s closely observing your every move, turned on by your obedience.'
-					'Suddenly an urge overcomes you and without him commanding you, your other hand travels upward your body stopping at your breast and you carefully begin to play with one of your nipples, gently rubbing it in a circular motion building up your arousal.'
-					'You don''t even care anymore if he approves or not, you''re too excited and it''s getting the best of you as you begin picking up the pace again, moaning loudly by now.'
+					'By the time you''ve gradually slowed down, the security guard himself has started jerking off as he closely observes your every move, turned on by your obedience.'
+					'Suddenly, an urge overcomes you, and without him commanding you, your other hand travels upward, stopping at your breast. You carefully begin to play with one of your nipples, gently rubbing it in a circular motion building up your arousal.'
+					'You don''t even care anymore if he approves or not. You''re too excited, and it''s getting the best of you as you begin picking up the pace again, moaning loudly by now.'
 					'"You little minx! Who told you to take the control?" he manages to say between his panting, "I''ll let you off this time as I love seeing you squirm, as you appease me... but use this instead" as he hands over a fake cock.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -207,9 +207,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 						gs 'boyStat', 'D2'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show6.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your eagerly grab the fake cock and rub it against your clit swiftly, your pussy lips have turned bright pink and you just want to explode. You look at him pleadingly to let you orgasm.'
-						'But to your dismay the security guard is only focused on himself as he''s furiously stroking his cock...'
-						'You pick up the pace not wanting to be outpaced by him and just as you''re about to orgasm, the security guard decides that it''s time for some payback, as he smugly commands you to stop touching yourself right away...'
+						'Your eagerly grab the fake cock and rub it against your clit swiftly. Your pussy lips have turned bright pink, and you just want to explode. You look at him pleadingly, begging him to let you orgasm.'
+						'But to your dismay, the security guard is only focused on himself as he''s furiously stroking his cock...'
+						'You pick up the pace, not wanting to be outpaced by him, but just as you''re about to orgasm, the security guard seems to decide that it''s time for some payback, as he smugly commands you to stop touching yourself right away...'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -219,11 +219,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 							$orgasm = 'yes'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show7.jpg"></center>'
-							'All of your body is screaming in agony as you obey and stop, your pulsating pussy being deprived of an orgasm and your mind is about to snap...'
+							'All of your body is screaming in agony as you obey and stop, your pulsating pussy deprived of an orgasm and your mind about to snap...'
 							'The security guard continues stroking as you look at him pleadingly again, letting out a small whimper, "Please, let me continue, I was so close..."'
-							'The room turns almost silent as you can only hear the sound from his squishy strokes and after a few moments he barely manages to tell you to continue on and you eagerly sit on the fake cock and, spreading your swollen pussy, you don''t know if he''ll stop you anew.'
-							'It doesn''t take long before you hear loud panting and groaning as he finishes but you''ve managed to faze him out as you''re approaching an orgasm once again as you''re now furiously penetrating yourself. You want to make sure that you''re able to finish before he''s able to stop you.'
-							'His commanding tone and the build up has finally come into fruition as your legs stiffen, your pussy goes numb and you orgasm violently, trembling, barely being able to sit still on the chair. The orgasm is so immense that you feel your ears ringing afterwards for a few minutes.'
+							'The room turns almost silent as you can only hear the sound from his squishy strokes, and after a few moments, he barely manages to tell you to continue on. You eagerly sit on the fake cock, spreading your swollen pussy, as you don''t know if he''ll stop you anew.'
+							'It doesn''t take long before you hear loud panting and groaning as he finishes, but you''ve managed to faze him out as you''re approaching an orgasm once again, now furiously penetrating yourself. You want to make sure that you''re able to finish before he''s able to stop you.'
+							'His commanding tone and the build up has finally come to fruition as your legs stiffen, your pussy goes numb and you orgasm violently, trembling, barely able to sit still on the chair. The orgasm is so immense that you feel your ears ringing afterwards for a few minutes.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -233,9 +233,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show8.jpg"></center>'
 								'You keep the fake cock inside you for a while as you calm down. The security guard is looking pleased at you.'
-								'Ashamed, you quickly grab your clothes and start putting on your clothes. While you''re getting dressed you look at him with dismay and impatiently ask, "Are we done now?"'
-								'The security guard grins and tells you to wait for a moment while he goes away explaining that he needs to go to take care of a thing and that he would be right back...'
-								'You make yourself complainant as possible as you smile and nod just wanting this to be over with so you can continue on with your day.'
+								'Ashamed, you quickly grab your clothes and start putting them on. While you''re getting dressed, you look at him with disgust and impatiently ask, "Are we done now?"'
+								'The security guard grins and tells you to wait for a moment while he goes away, explaining that he needs to go to take care of a thing and that he will be right back...'
+								'You make yourself look as compliant as possible as you smile and nod, just wanting this to be over with so you can continue on with your day.'
 
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -248,20 +248,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show9.jpg"></center>'
 									'You patiently sit and wait for the security guard to return. You closely listen to every little sound happening outside the office hoping that he''ll return soon and let you go.'
-									'All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
+									'All of a sudden, you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
 
 									if policeCalled <= 4:
 										'To your dismay the security guard has not only called the manager but there''s even a police officer standing there with them.'
-										'The security guard smugly proclaims, "Here she is officer I had her locked up all the time..." He turns to the manager, "Don''t worry sir, I''ve already recovered the video evidence..."'
-										'The manager nods while the police officer takes approaches you resolutely, telling you to stand and turn around so he can handcuff you.'
-										'You obediently turn around and the police officer tightens his cuffs so they sit real tight. As he finishes he grabs you by the arm and leads you away...'
+										'The security guard smugly proclaims, "Here she is officer. I had her locked up the whole time..." He turns to the manager, "Don''t worry sir, I''ve already recovered the video evidence..."'
+										'The manager nods while the police officer approaches you resolutely, telling you to stand and turn around so he can handcuff you.'
+										'You obediently turn around, and the police officer tightens his cuffs so they sit real tight. As he finishes, he grabs you by the arm and leads you away...'
 
 										act 'Go to the police station':gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'shplft'
 
 									else
-										'The door opens and to your surprise there''s only the security guard standing there holding a video cassette in his hand, "Sorry for the wait, it took me a while to get hold of the cassette."'
+										'The door opens, and thankfully, there''s only the security guard standing there holding a video cassette in his hand. "Sorry for the wait, it took me a while to get hold of the cassette."'
 										'Your face brightens as you know that he went through all sorts of trouble to leave no trace behind that you''ve ever been here.'
-										'"Here take the tape and destroy it." he states, "Be gone now before anyone spots you and we both get in trouble."'
+										'"Here take the tape and destroy it," he states, "Be gone now before anyone spots you and we both get in trouble."'
 										'You nod and hurriedly jump away from the chair, grabbing the tape as you walk by the security guard...'
 
 										act 'Head outside':gt 'city_center'
@@ -283,26 +283,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj1.jpg"></center>'
 	'"How about I give you a blowjob and you let me go?" you calmly suggest.'
-	'The security guard is taken aback a little by your suggestion but it doesn''t take long before you notice a smirk on his face, "How about this, if you perform well enough I''ll let you go otherwise I''ll be calling the cops."'
-	'Not having lot of choice you look him in the eyes and nod.'
-	'"Good! But before we begin I want a memento to remember you by." he adds as he pulls out his cellphone.'
+	'The security guard is taken aback a little by your suggestion, but it doesn''t take long before you notice a smirk on his face. "How about this, if you perform well enough, I''ll let you go, otherwise I''ll be calling the cops."'
+	'Not having lot of choice, you look him in the eyes and nod.'
+	'"Good! But before we begin I want a memento to remember you by," he adds as he pulls out his cellphone.'
 
 	act 'Take picture':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You happily stand up and smile as you can hear his cellphone camera snaps.'
-		'"This will do. I can''t wait to show you off to my friends." he tells you.'
+		'You happily stand up and smile as you can hear his cellphone camera snap.'
+		'"This will do. I can''t wait to show you off to my friends," he tells you.'
 		'You can''t do anything more than smile and nod as you need to play along so he lets you go.'
-		'"That''s enough, girl! Time to get to it. Remove your clothes let me see your naked body!" he commands.'
+		'"That''s enough, girl! Time to get to it. Remove your clothes, let me see your naked body!" he commands.'
 
 		act 'Strip':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You pleadingly look at him but he turns his head around to avoid meeting your eyes. Seeing he won''t budge you slowly start taking off your clothes.'
-			'The security guards gaze turns to you again and he''s carefully watching as you remove one cloth after another as you try to cover up your naked body.'
+			'You pleadingly look at him, but he turns his head around to avoid meeting your eyes. Seeing he won''t budge, you slowly start taking off your clothes.'
+			'The security guard''s gaze turns to you again, and he carefully watches as you remove one cloth after another as you try to cover up your naked body.'
 			'"Good job, girl! Look at your fine breasts. Don''t be shy and cover yourself, the plan is to arouse me..." he smirks, "Now get on your knees."'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub'
@@ -312,8 +312,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj4.jpg"></center>'
-				'You get down on your knees and await while he''s rubbing his cock through his pants.'
-				'After a short wait he unzips the pants and releases his cock. As it pops out you let out a gasp, surprised by the massive size, "You''re way bigger than I expected." you say as you observe his stiff cock.'
+				'You get down on your knees and wait while he rubs his cock through his pants.'
+				'After a short while, he unzips the pants and releases his cock. As it pops out, you let out a gasp, surprised by the massive size. "You''re way bigger than I expected," you say as you observe his stiff cock.'
 				'He lets out a laugh and jokes, "Are you sure that it will be able to fit in your mouth?"'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub'
@@ -323,9 +323,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj5.jpg"></center>'
-					'Triggered by his joke and wanting to show him up you slowly move your lips near his cock and give his glans a little kiss. You can hear him let out a soft groan, he must be really sensitive.'
-					'Feeling encouraged you start moving your lips around his glans, letting out your tongue to tease his penis head.'
-					'The security guard isn''t saying anything and seems to be pleased by your performance...'
+					'Triggered by his joke and wanting to show him up, you slowly move your lips near his cock and give his glans a little kiss. You can hear him let out a soft groan. He must be really sensitive.'
+					'Feeling encouraged, you start moving your lips around his glans, letting out your tongue to tease his penis head.'
+					'The security guard doesn''t say anything and seems to be pleased by your performance...'
 					'You look up at him and give him a little smile, biting your lip before moving your tongue up and down his shaft...'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
@@ -335,10 +335,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 						*clr & cla
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj6.jpg"></center>'
-						'Not wanting to tease him anymore you wrap your lips around his glans and slowly let the head glide deeper inside your mouth. You didn''t expect him to taste this good...'
+						'Not wanting to tease him anymore, you wrap your lips around his glans and slowly let the head glide deeper inside your mouth. You didn''t expect him to taste this good...'
 						'The security guard didn''t expect you to be this bold as you feel his whole body stiffen...'
-						'After a few moments you pick up the pace and before you know it, you''ve swallowed half his cock. You''re totally engulfed and even manage to forget why you''re sucking him off.'
-						'It doesn''t take long before his cock is twitching and he tells you pull out before he cums...'
+						'After a few moments, you pick up the pace, and before you know it, you''ve swallowed half his cock. You''re totally engulfed and even manage to forget why you''re sucking him off.'
+						'It doesn''t take long before his cock is twitching and he tells you to pull out before he cums...'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -348,9 +348,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj7.jpg"></center>'
 							'Disappointed, you pull out and let out a loud mouth sound as you remove your lips from his cock.'
-							'By now the security guard is panting heavily and you give him a minute to recover before you start tugging his cock.'
-							'You grab his cock quite hard and you start quickly stroking him up and down. You''re enjoying yourself as you''re in command and he''s at your mercy.'
-							'You notice a little pre-cum come and you feel this urge to slow down and tease him as you want to drag this out for as long as possible...'
+							'By now, the security guard is panting heavily, and you give him a minute to recover before you start tugging his cock.'
+							'You grab his cock quite hard, and you start quickly stroking him up and down. You''re enjoying yourself as you''re in command and he''s at your mercy.'
+							'You notice a little pre-cum come out, and you feel this urge to slow down and tease him as you want to drag this out for as long as possible...'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'dom'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -361,10 +361,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 								spafinloc = 15
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj8.jpg"></center>'
-								'"Don''t you dare slowing down!" he manages to yell out just as you slowed down the pace...'
-								'Surprised by his reaction, you quickly pick up the pace and as your hand moves up and down his cock it stops twitching and gets really stiff and after two more tugs he shoots all over your chest area...'
-								'As you look down you notice you''re covered in his thick cum... You give his cock a few more tugs to get it all out and then let go of it as it continues to twitch after being let go.'
-								'"Get cleaned up and I''ll be back soon!" he tells you as he zips his pants and leaves the office...'
+								'"Don''t you dare slowing down!" he manages to yell out just as you start to...'
+								'Surprised by his reaction, you quickly pick up the pace, and as your hand moves up and down his cock, it stops twitching and gets really stiff. After two more tugs, he shoots all over your chest area...'
+								'As you look down, you notice you''re covered in his thick cum... You give his cock a few more tugs to get it all out and then let go of it as it continues to twitch.'
+								'"Get cleaned up, and I''ll be back soon!" he tells you as he zips his pants and leaves the office...'
 
 								gs 'arousal', 'hj', 2, 'dom'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -380,14 +380,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj9.jpg"></center>'
 									'You clean yourself up and get dressed as soon you hear the door close. There''s nothing more to do than patiently sit and wait for the security guard to return.'
-									'You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office hoping that he''ll return soon and let you go. All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
+									'You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office, hoping that he''ll return soon and let you go. All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
 
 									if policeCalled <= 3:
 										toldonguard = 2
-										'To your dismay the security guard has not only called the manager but there''s even a police officer standing there with them.'
-										'The security guard smugly proclaims, "Here she is officer I had her locked up all the time..." He turns to the manager, "Don''t worry sir, I''ve already recovered the video evidence..."'
-										'The manager nods while the police officer takes approaches you resolutely, telling you to stand and turn around so he can handcuff you.'
-										'You obediently turn around and the police officer tightens his cuffs so they sit real tight. As he finishes he grabs you by the arm and leads you away...'
+										'To your dismay, the security guard has not only called the manager but there''s even a police officer standing there with them.'
+										'The security guard smugly proclaims, "Here she is officer I had her locked up the whole time..." He turns to the manager, "Don''t worry sir, I''ve already recovered the video evidence..."'
+										'The manager nods while the police officer approaches you resolutely, telling you to stand and turn around so he can handcuff you.'
+										'You obediently turn around, and the police officer tightens his cuffs so they sit real tight. As he finishes, he grabs you by the arm and leads you away...'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -395,9 +395,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 										act 'Go to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'shplft'
 
 									else
-										'The door opens and to your surprise there''s the only the security guard standing there holding a video cassette in his hand, "Sorry for the wait, it took me a while to get hold of the cassette."'
+										'The door opens, and thankfully, there''s only the security guard standing there holding a video cassette in his hand. "Sorry for the wait, it took me a while to get hold of the cassette."'
 										'Your face brightens as you know that he went through all sorts of trouble to leave no trace behind that you''ve ever been here.'
-										'"Here take the tape and destroy it." he states, "Be gone now before anyone spots you and we both get in trouble."'
+										'"Here take the tape and destroy it," he states, "Be gone now before anyone spots you and we both get in trouble."'
 										'You nod and hurriedly jump away from the chair, grabbing the tape as you walk by the security guard...'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -423,18 +423,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bribe':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/offermoney.jpg"></center>'
 	'You look the security guard straight in the eyes, "I can offer you money if you let me go."'
 	'The security guard begins to chuckle, "You? Offer me money? Don''t be silly girl, you can''t possibly bribe me... Where would you have the money for that..."'
-	'You pout a little as you listen to him, "Just tell me how much you want and I''ll pay you off..." as you finish you give him a little wink.'
-	'"If you can afford the stuff why did you steal?" he remarks.'
+	'You pout a little as you listen to him, "Just tell me how much you want, and I''ll pay you off..." As you finish, you give him a little wink.'
+	'"If you can afford the stuff, why did you steal?" he remarks.'
 
 	act 'Explain':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/offermoney.jpg"></center>'
-		'"You want my honest answer?" you look at him in all seriousness, "Simply put, because I can and the adrenaline kick is amazing!"'
+		'"You want my honest answer?" you look at him, a serious expression on your face, "Simply put, because I can and the adrenaline kick is amazing!"'
 		'The security guard smirks, "So you''re only doing it for the fun of it?"'
-		'Looking pleased, you give him a satisfying nod.'
-		'All of a sudden he changes his posture, "I don''t usually do this but if you give me 5000<b>₽</b> then we''re all good."'
+		'Looking pleased, you give him a satisfied nod.'
+		'All of a sudden, he changes his posture, "I don''t usually do this, but if you give me 5000 <b>₽</b>, then we''re all good."'
 		'"And if I don''t?" you curiously inquire.'
 		'"You''ll have to face the consequences then..." he shortly replies.'
 
@@ -445,10 +445,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bribe':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/offermoney.jpg"></center>'
 			'You burst out in laughter, "Fine, fine. I''ll pay up don''t worry... Relax, I was only joking around with you."'
-			'"Sure, sure... Hurry up now, show me the money, before anyone shows up..." he hurries you on.'
+			'"Sure, sure... Hurry up now, show me the money before anyone shows up..." he hurries you on.'
 			'You keep on laughing as you hand over the money to him.'
-			'He quickly counts the money and then has you stand up and hurries you outside the office, pushing you on. He explains to which way to take and not to talk to anyone.'
-			'You give him a smile and thank him for being so nice to you... You turn around a last time to tease him before turning the corner.'
+			'He quickly counts the money and then has you stand up and hurries you outside the office, pushing you on. He tells you which way to take and not to talk to anyone.'
+			'You give him a smile and thank him for being so nice to you... You turn around one last time to tease him before turning the corner.'
 
 			act 'Walk out':gt 'city_center'
 		end
@@ -461,11 +461,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bribe':
 			'You shake your head, "I''m not interested in paying you off. Do your worst..." you challenge him.'
 			'His face turns red with anger as he turns away from you and walks out of the office...'
 			*nl
-			'Some minutes pass while you patiently wait for him to return. You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office. All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
-			'"There she is officer. This girl was stealing from the supermarket. We''ve got evidence and everything." he states clearly irritated by your arrogance.'
+			'Some minutes pass while you patiently wait for him to return. You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office. All of a sudden, you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
+			'To your dismay, you see the security guard has returned with a police officer in tow. "There she is officer. This girl was stealing from the supermarket. We''ve got evidence and everything," the guard states, clearly irritated by your arrogance.'
 			'The officer sighs and determinedly walks over to you, "Turn around girl, I need to cuff you..."'
-			'Without uttering a word you turn around and let the officer cuff you. The cuffs are sitting tight but you refuse to give the smallest satisfaction that you''re hurting to the security guard.'
-			'The police officer chats with the security guard before leading you away to the Police station...'
+			'Without uttering a word, you turn around and let the officer cuff you. The cuffs are sitting tight, but you refuse to give the security guard the smallest satisfaction by letting him know that.'
+			'The police officer chats with the security guard before leading you away to the police station...'
 
 			act 'Go to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'shplft'
 		end
@@ -477,21 +477,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quiet':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/quiet.jpg"></center>'
-	'All of a sudden you hesitate, why should you offer him anything. You might as keep quiet as the end result will still be the same.'
+	'All of a sudden you hesitate. Why should you offer him anything? You might as well keep quiet as the end result will still be the same.'
 	'"Well girl, don''t test my patience, I don''t have all the day. Tell me now what do you have to offer."'
-	'You give him a look full of disgust. You''re going to see this throughout no matter the consequences.'
-	'"Well? Why did you go all quiet all of a sudden?" he demands an answer. Noticing that you won''t reply his face turns red and slams the door behind him...'
+	'You give him a look full of disgust. You''re going to see this through, no matter the consequences.'
+	'"Well? Why did you go all quiet all of a sudden?" he demands. Noticing that you won''t reply, his face turns red and he stomps out of the room, slamming the door behind him...'
 
 	act 'Wait':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-		'Some minutes pass while you patiently wait for him to return. You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office. All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
-		'"There she is officer. This girl was stealing from the supermarket. We''ve got evidence and everything." he states clearly irritated by your arrogance.'
+		'Some minutes pass while you patiently wait for him to return. You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office. All of a sudden, you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
+		'To your dismay, you see the security guard has returned with a police officer in tow. "There she is officer. This girl was stealing from the supermarket. We''ve got evidence and everything," the guard states, clearly irritated by your arrogance.'
 		'The officer sighs and determinedly walks over to you, "Turn around girl, I need to cuff you..."'
-		'Without uttering a word you turn around and let the officer cuff you. The cuffs are sitting tight but you refuse to give the smallest satisfaction that you''re hurting to the security guard.'
-		'The police officer chats with the security guard before leading you away to the Police station...'
+		'Without uttering a word, you turn around and let the officer cuff you. The cuffs are sitting tight, but you refuse to give the security guard the smallest satisfaction by letting him know that.'
+		'The police officer chats with the security guard before leading you away to the police station...'
 
 		act 'Go to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'shplft'
 	end
@@ -504,7 +504,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge1.jpg"></center>'
-	'The guard forcefully drags you into the room and shoves you towards the chair, saying "Well well, look who''s back... if it isn''t the little rat!" he heatedly comments.'
+	'The guard forcefully drags you into the room and shoves you towards the chair. "Well well, look who''s back... if it isn''t the little rat!" he heatedly comments.'
 	'<i>Fuck it''s the same guard, now you''ve done it, <<$pcs_nickname>>, get prepared for whatever awaits you... your fate is in his hands...</i>'
 	'"I hate you fucking rats. Do you know what I had to go through to get away from ending up in jail. Luckily one of the pigs didn''t mind getting bribed so I got away," he grins, "And now for your punishment."'
 
@@ -513,10 +513,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You squirm and look apologetically at him, "Please... You have to believe me I didn''t have any option. They made me confess that you forced yourself onto me..." you try to deceit him.'
+		'You squirm and look apologetically at him. "Please... You have to believe me, I didn''t have any option. They made me confess that you forced yourself onto me..." you try to deceive him.'
 		'Fuming, he lunges towards you, "Listen here, you little slut. I don''t give a shit if they forced you into anything. You ratted and you need to be taught a lesson."'
 		'You put together your hands pleading for mercy as a last ditch effort to make him rethink it all.'
-		'But to your dismay he doesn''t budge, "Like pleading will help you now, slut!" and before you know it he''s standing next you.'
+		'But to your dismay, he doesn''t budge, and before you know it, he''s standing next you. "Like pleading will help you now, slut!"'
 
 		act 'Squeak':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -524,9 +524,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge3.jpg"></center>'
 			'Before you''re able to react to what he''s saying, you feel a cold hand sliding down your body towards your breasts.'
-			'Reacting instinctively you look up only to see the security guards eyes filled with rage and arousal. His hand keeps sliding down and it doesn''t take long before he is fondling one of your breasts.'
-			'You let out a soft moan as he softly touches your nipple, making you shiver with excitement, "You''re enjoying yourself, aren''t you slut?" he inquires as you let out a moan as an answer to his inquiry.'
-			'All of sudden you can feel the mood change as he violently grabs hold of your breast and starts roughly kneading it, "It''s not one of those times where you''re supposed to feel excited, slut." The pain you feel in one of your breast is almost unbearable.'
+			'Reacting instinctively, you look up only to see the security guard''s eyes filled with rage and arousal. His hand keeps sliding down, and it doesn''t take long before he is fondling one of your breasts.'
+			'You let out a soft moan as he softly touches your nipple, making you shiver with excitement. "You''re enjoying yourself, aren''t you slut?" he inquires as you let out another moan as an answer.'
+			'All of a sudden, you can feel the mood change as he violently grabs hold of your breast and starts roughly kneading it. "It''s not one of those times where you''re supposed to feel excited, slut." The pain you feel in your breast is almost unbearable.'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub', 'humiliation'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -538,11 +538,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge4.jpg"></center>'
-				'In sheer desperation you begin to look for a way to stop. You try looking at him pleadingly but to no avail. Next you try to speak up but he kneads it even harder, "Want this to stop?" he asks.'
-				'Urgently wanting him to stop you uncontrollably nod, "On your knees then whore. I want you to go deep and don''t you dare letting me feeling those teeth either," as he lets go of your sore breast.'
+				'In sheer desperation, you begin to look for a way to convince him to stop. You try looking at him pleadingly but to no avail. Next you try to speak up, but he kneads your breast even harder. "Want this to stop?" he asks.'
+				'Urgently wanting that, you uncontrollably nod. "On your knees then whore. I want you to go deep and don''t you dare let me feel those teeth either," he says as he lets go of your sore breast.'
 				'You quickly get down on your knees and unbutton his pants, exposing his bare cock. You grab hold of his shaft and gently lick on his glans to get him ready. You open your mouth and wrap your lips around his cock and slowly begin working your way up and down.'
-				'While you''re doing this you hear an annoyed sigh and you feel a hand on your back-head locking you in. Without any hesitation the security guard begins thrusting going deeper for every thrust, "Remember what I said, I don''t want to feel any teeth!"'
-				'Fearing what he might do you try your best to accommodate him. His thrusts become more rapid and he goes really deep down your throat and there are several times you feel that you''re close to throwing up, "Lube it up whore if you don''t want to feel any pain..." you hear him say as you gag once more on his cock.'
+				'While you''re doing this, you hear an annoyed sigh, and you feel a hand on the back of your head locking you in. Without any hesitation, the security guard begins thrusting, going deeper with every thrust. "Remember what I said, I don''t want to feel any teeth!"'
+				'Fearing what he might do, you try your best to accommodate him. His thrusts become more rapid, and he goes really deep down your throat. There are several times you feel that you''re close to throwing up. "Lube it up whore if you don''t want to feel any pain..." you hear him say as you gag once more on his cock.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'deepthroat'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -552,10 +552,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 					gs 'pain', 7, 'vaginal', 'tear'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge5.jpg"></center>'
-					'"That''s enough of that!" he yells out as he pulls quickly out of your mouth, making your mouth doing a wet plop sound. He grabs you harshly by the shoulders and leads you over to the desk where he bends you over it, giving him a full look of your orifices.'
-					'"Which one should we take," he teases as you await him to decide, hoping whichever he picks he''ll be gentle. "This one will suffice today!" he declares as he furiously pushes inside your pussy without any care in the world. As he penetrates, you let out a loud scream by the sheer pain you''re experiencing.'
-					'"Scream as much as you want!" he yells out between his thrusts, "It only turns me on even more!" he continues frantically pounding you. He''s going deep and you can feel his cock hitting your cervix.'
-					'After a few minutes you expect him to slow down but he''s persisting and grabs you by the hair and continues on pounding you, leaving you in despair between pain and pleasure.'
+					'"That''s enough of that!" he yells out as he pulls quickly out of your mouth with a wet plop. He grabs you harshly by the shoulders and leads you over to the desk, which he bends you over, giving him a full look at your orifices.'
+					'"Which one should we take," he teases as you await him to decide, hoping whichever he picks he''ll be gentle. "This one will suffice today!" he declares as he furiously pushes inside your pussy without any care in the world. As he penetrates, you let out a loud scream from the sheer pain you''re experiencing.'
+					'"Scream as much as you want!" he yells out between his thrusts, "It only turns me on even more!" he continues frantically pounding you. He''s going deep, and you can feel his cock hitting your cervix.'
+					'After a few minutes, you expect him to slow down, but he persists, grabbing you by the hair and continuing on pounding you, leaving you in despair between pain and pleasure.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -566,10 +566,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 						spafinloc = 15
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge6.jpg"></center>'
-						'You can feel your excitement being built up as you near an orgasm and prepare for it. The security guard is still pounding you away but you''ve adjusted really well and by now you''re feeling more pleasure than pain.'
-						'You''re loudly moaning but so is he, your pussy walls are tightening and squishing his cock and just as you''re about orgasm he pulls out leaving your hole empty, craving for his cock to enter you again, "Did you really expect that I would let you orgasm?" he smirks, "Didn''t I tell you no pleasure for you today!"'
-						'You look meekly at him as he pushes you down on your knees and begins jerking off himself. You''re still feeling cheated on your orgasm and pout as he begins to groan and it doesn''t take long before your breasts are covered by his warm cum.'
-						'He gives his cock a few more jerks, making sure he''s drained his cock and he keenly looks at your chest, admiring his work. As everything settles down you almost tear up, reminded by the pain you feel in your vagina and breast.'
+						'You can feel your excitement being built up as you near an orgasm and prepare for it. The security guard is still pounding you away, but you''ve adjusted really well, and by now, you''re feeling more pleasure than pain.'
+						'You''re loudly moaning but so is he as your pussy walls tighten and squish his cock. Just as you''re about to orgasm, he pulls out, leaving your hole empty, craving for his cock to enter you again. "Did you really expect that I would let you orgasm?" he smirks, "Didn''t I tell you no pleasure for you today!"'
+						'You look meekly at him as he pushes you down on your knees and begins jerking off himself. You''re still feeling cheated on your orgasm and pout as he begins to groan, and it doesn''t take long before your breasts are covered by his warm cum.'
+						'He gives his cock a few more jerks, making sure he''s drained it, and he keenly looks at your chest, admiring his work. As everything settles down, you almost tear up, reminded by the pain you feel in your vagina and breast.'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -582,12 +582,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge7.jpg"></center>'
 							!Clean yourself up as he watches, can''t believe what you''ve just done, he calls the cops and threatens Sveta not to say anything cause next time he won''t be this gentle
-							'"Here, get cleaned up and dress yourself!" he hands you over a towel. The security guard remains observing you while you clean yourself up, making sure you''ve cleaned yourself properly not leaving a trace behind.'
-							'While you''re putting on your clothes you can''t let go of feeling ashamed to what you''ve experienced and try your best to avoid eye contact.'
-							'"Sit down on that chair and wait for me to return whore!" he commands as you barely manage to even give him a subtle nod. As you sit down he walks up to you, "Listen here. Don''t you dare telling anyone about this... I know who you are and where you live and the next time I won''t be as gentle as this time." With that he turns and walks out of the office, locking it, leaving you to ponder on what''s about to happen next.'
+							'"Here, get cleaned up and dress yourself!" he hands you over a towel. The security guard remains observing you while you clean yourself up, making sure you do it properly not leaving a trace behind.'
+							'While you''re putting on your clothes, you can''t let go of the feeling of shame from what you''ve experienced and try your best to avoid eye contact.'
+							'"Sit down on that chair and wait for me to return whore!" he commands as you barely manage to even give him a subtle nod. As you sit down, he walks up to you, "Listen here. Don''t you dare go telling anyone about this... I know who you are and where you live and the next time I won''t be as gentle as this time." With that, he turns and walks out of the office, locking it, leaving you to ponder on what''s about to happen next.'
 							*nl
-							'Some minutes pass by and you hear several voices approaching the door. As they open up you see the security guard standing there with a police officer, "This one?" he asks as he points at you. The security guard nods his head, "Yeah she''s a real pain in the ass."'
-							'The officer walks over to you and cuffs you and begins leading you away. As you''re being led by the security guard he shines up in a smile, mocking you.'
+							'Some minutes pass by, and you hear several voices approaching the door. As it opens up, you see the security guard standing there with a police officer. "This one?" the officer asks as he points at you. The security guard nods his head, "Yeah she''s a real pain in the ass."'
+							'The officer walks over to you, cuffs you and begins leading you away. As you''re being led by the security guard, he flashes you a smile, mocking you.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'

locations/shulgabath.qsrc

@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Bathroom</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/vanna.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Uncle Sergey''s bathroom is small and very unpretentious. Nevertheless, it has everything a bathroom needs. There is a <a href="exec: gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a> above the sink, where you can ' + iif(pcs_hairbsh = 0,'<a href="exec: gt ''mirror'',''brush''">brush</a>','brush') + ' your hair, a shower and bath tub.'
+	'Uncle Sergey''s bathroom is small and very unpretentious. Nevertheless, it has everything a bathroom needs. There is a <a href="exec: gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a> above the sink, where you can ' + iif(pcs_hairbsh = 0,'<a href="exec: gt ''mirror'',''brush''">brush</a>','brush') + ' your hair, a shower and a bathtub.'
 	*nl
 
 	act 'Return to the hallway': gt'shulgahall'
@@ -57,7 +57,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sexev1':
 	sh_sonya_sexev += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/bj'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'When you enter the bathroom, you freeze when you hear a girl''s voice in there. You carefully open the door to see Sonia sucking Sergey''s cock. She''s even taking a video of herself doing it... you wonder why?'
+	'When you reach the bathroom, you freeze when you hear a girl''s voice in there. You carefully open the door to see Sonia sucking Sergey''s cock. She''s even taking a video of herself doing it... you wonder why?'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -73,26 +73,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sexev2':
 	sh_sonya_sexev += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/ev2_1'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'When you want to enter the bathroom, you see Sonia standing in front of the mirror. Luckily she didn''t see you; she was too occupied counting money. Your curiosity gets the better of you, and you decide to watch her for a while. Where did she get that money?'
+	'When you start to enter the bathroom, you see Sonia standing in front of the mirror. Luckily, she doesn''t seem to see you; she is too occupied counting money. Your curiosity gets the better of you, and you decide to watch her for a while. Where did she get that money?'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/ev2_2'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'Sonia starts to undress, and then puts on a delicate lingerie set. She then touches up on her make-up, fixing every little blemish she can find.'
-		'You realize she''s probably going to come out of the bathroom soon, and quickly move to the kitchen and hide there.'
-		'Sure enough, Sonia comes out of the bathroom a few seconds later, and heads straight for uncle Sergey''s bedroom.'
+		'Sonia starts to undress and then puts on a delicate lingerie set. She then touches up on her make-up, fixing every little blemish she can find.'
+		'You realize she''s probably going to come out of the bathroom soon and quickly move to the kitchen and hide there.'
+		'Sure enough, Sonia comes out of the bathroom a few seconds later and heads straight for uncle Sergey''s bedroom.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev2_3'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You quickly sneak to the door, and carefully open it just enough so you can see what''s happening inside the room.'
+			'You quickly sneak to the door and carefully open it just enough so you can see what''s happening inside the room.'
 			'What you see does not surprise you in the slightest; Sonia is on her knees in front of Sergey, eagerly sucking on his dick.'
 			'"Very nice, baby. Take it deeper... all the way in, there you go..." he encourages her.'
-			'After sucking his dick for a few minutes, Sonia pulls away from Sergey. Just when he''s about to ask if something''s wrong, she grins lewdly at him and whispers: "Sergey Borisovich, I want you to fuck me like I''m the last whore on the planet! I''m all yours, baby."'
+			'After sucking his dick for a few minutes, Sonia pulls away from Sergey. Just when he''s about to ask if something''s wrong, she grins lewdly at him and whispers, "Sergey Shulgin, I want you to fuck me like I''m the last whore on the planet! I''m all yours, baby."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'gopsex', 'masturb_gg'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -100,8 +100,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sexev2':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev2_4'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'Sergey makes Sonia bend over for him and rams his cock inside her sopping cunt. When he rhythmically fucks your classmate, Sonia moans and groans while her face turns a deep red. She''s completely lost in the moment... for a second you wonder why Sergey even gave her money, looking at her like this makes you think she probably would''ve done it for free anyway.'
-				'After a few minutes Sonia orgasms violently on Sergey''s cock, and even squirts a little.'
+				'Sergey makes Sonia bend over for him and rams his cock inside her sopping cunt. When he rhythmically fucks your classmate, Sonia moans and groans while her face turns a deep red. She''s completely lost in the moment... for a second you wonder why Sergey even gave her money. Looking at her like this makes you think she probably would''ve done it for free anyway.'
+				'After a few minutes, Sonia orgasms violently on Sergey''s cock and even squirts a little.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'gopsex', 'masturb_gg'
@@ -109,8 +109,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sexev2':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev2_5'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'When he''s too worked up to postpone his orgasm any longer, Sergey says: "On your knees! Fast!"'
-					'Sonia aims to please, and immediately drops to her knees in front of him with her mouth wide open. Sergey finishes inside Sonia''s mouth, and she swallows his load eagerly. She loudly smacks her lips and smiles at him: "Mmm... delicious!"'
+					'When he''s too worked up to postpone his orgasm any longer, Sergey says, "On your knees! Fast!"'
+					'Sonia aims to please and immediately drops to her knees in front of him with her mouth wide open. Sergey finishes inside Sonia''s mouth, and she swallows his load eagerly. She loudly smacks her lips and smiles at him. "Mmm... delicious!"'
 					gs 'gopsex', 'masturb_gg'
 					'Now that they''re done, you realize you should probably get the hell out of there before they find you staring. You quickly shut the door.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
@@ -189,13 +189,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bazar':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/b.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Ever since Sonia inadvertedly got way too drunk and gave five guys including Vitek and his friends a simultaneous blowjob near the disco, her reputation in Pavlovsk has been in shambles. The girls in her class all give her the silent treatment, pretending she does not exist. Meanwhile the guys all treat her like a cheap whore and regularly ask (or sometimes even demand) sex from her, knowing she doesn''t have the strength to say no.'
+	'Ever since Sonia inadvertently got way too drunk and gave five guys including Vitek and his friends a simultaneous blowjob near the disco, her reputation in Pavlovsk has been in shambles. The girls in her class all give her the silent treatment, pretending she does not exist. Meanwhile, the guys all treat her like a cheap whore and regularly ask (or sometimes even demand) sex from her, knowing she doesn''t have the strength to say no.'
 
 	sonya_textb_vanna = rand(1,7)
 	if sonya_textb_vanna = 1:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'You spend some time chatting about everyday things with Sonia.'
-	if sonya_textb_vanna = 2 and SchoolAtestat = 0:$sonya_textb_vanna	= 'When you ask Sonia how she''s doing in school, she laughs and says: "It''s very easy to get good grades at our school. All you have to do is get the teachers to like you. And as you may know, they all like me..."'
-	if sonya_textb_vanna = 2 and SchoolAtestat = 1:$sonya_textb_vanna	= 'When you ask Sonia about the kind of work she does since school ended, she shrugs: "It''s tough to get a decent job nowadays. I''m lucky I have some nice guys like Sergey helping me out with my bills, otherwise I wouldn''t know how to make ends meet!"'
-	if sonya_textb_vanna = 3:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'When you ask Sonia how often she comes to meet Sergey, you get a surprisingly honest answer: "It depends. Usually a few times a week, depending how much money he has. If he can afford it I come by more often, if money is tight I don''t visit as much. You don''t look like a fool, you know why I''m here. Still, I have so say... being fucked by Sergey is amazing! He''s more mature than most guys I sleep with, and such a skilled lover..."'
+	if sonya_textb_vanna = 2 and SchoolAtestat = 0:$sonya_textb_vanna	= 'When you ask Sonia how she''s doing in school, she laughs and says, "It''s very easy to get good grades at our school. All you have to do is get the teachers to like you. And as you may know, they all like me..."'
+	if sonya_textb_vanna = 2 and SchoolAtestat = 1:$sonya_textb_vanna	= 'When you ask Sonia about the kind of work she has been doing since school ended, she shrugs. "It''s tough to get a decent job nowadays. I''m lucky I have some nice guys like Sergey helping me out with my bills, otherwise I wouldn''t know how to make ends meet!"'
+	if sonya_textb_vanna = 3:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'When you ask Sonia how often she comes to meet Sergey, you get a surprisingly honest answer: "It depends. Usually a few times a week, depending how much money he has. If he can afford it, I come by more often, if money is tight I don''t visit as much. You don''t look like a fool, you know why I''m here. Still, I have to say... being fucked by Sergey is amazing! He''s more mature than most guys I sleep with, and such a skilled lover..."'
 	if sonya_textb_vanna = 4:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'Sonia tells you about some interesting encounters she had in the Pavlovsk hotel the other day.'
 	if sonya_textb_vanna = 5:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'Sonia tells an interesting story.'
 	if sonya_textb_vanna = 6:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'You spend some time chatting with Sonia, mostly sharing what the two of you have done today.'
@@ -204,7 +204,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bazar':
 	'<br><<$sonya_textb_vanna>><br>'
 
 	if sonya_bazar_count = 0:
-		'Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have time to go. Maybe I''ll see you here again, so we can chat some more!'
+		'Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have time to go. Maybe I''ll see you here again so we can chat some more!'
 	else
 		act 'Chat some more': gt 'shulgabath', 'bazar'
 	end
@@ -244,9 +244,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lesb':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/ev1_1.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'You fill the bath tub and get in. Sonia is still standing near the mirror, fixing her make-up. She doesn''t seem to mind that you are in here with her.'
-	'Then you smile at her and ask: "Hey Sonia... would you like to take a bath with me?"'
-	'Sonia looks puzzled for a second, and asks: "Like... you want me to get in the bath with you right now?"'
-	'When you nod, she grins: "Actually, that sounds like fun! Sure!" and quickly gets naked, sliding her naked body into the warm tub water.'
+	'Then you smile at her and ask, "Hey Sonia... would you like to take a bath with me?"'
+	'Sonia looks puzzled for a second, and asks, "Like... you want me to get in the bath with you right now?"'
+	'When you nod, she grins, "Actually, that sounds like fun! Sure!" and quickly gets naked, sliding her body into the warm tub water.'
 	if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the bath.'
 
 	act 'Continue':
@@ -254,13 +254,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lesb':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev1_2'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'"Mmmm..." Sonia muses, enjoying the warmth of the bath water slowly seeping into her body. For the next few minutes you just sit in the bath next to each other. Sonia occasionally looks at you, but doesn''t say much.'
+		'"Mmmm..." Sonia muses, enjoying the warmth of the bath water slowly seeping into her body. For the next few minutes, you just sit in the bath next to each other. Sonia occasionally looks at you but doesn''t say much.'
 
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev1_3'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'Just when you were about to say something, Sonia moves closer to you and kisses you full on your mouth. You freeze for a second, and then think to yourself... why the hell not?'
+			'Just when you were about to say something, Sonia moves closer to you and kisses you full on your mouth. You freeze for a second and then think to yourself... why the hell not?'
 			'You kiss Sonia back eagerly, playing with her tongue as she thrusts it into your mouth.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 10, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -274,9 +274,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lesb':
 				$orgasm_txt = 'Sonia''s constant teasing pushes you over the edge, and you orgasm loudly when she licks your clit again.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', -5, 'lesbian'
-				'Sonia grins at you and asks playfully: "Did you like my tongue on your pussy, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+				'Sonia grins at you and asks playfully, "Did you like my tongue on your pussy, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 				'"Absolutely!" you nod. "Come on, let me do the same for you! I want to taste you too!"'
-				'"I can''t right now, my mother is waiting for me at home", Sonia says wistfully. "Maybe next time?"'
+				'"I can''t right now, my mother is waiting for me at home," Sonia says wistfully. "Maybe next time?"'
 				'Sonia kisses you again, and you taste yourself on her lips. Mmmm... next time you really want to get a taste of her too!'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -298,11 +298,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'serg_sex':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/vanna/gr/ev1_1_'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'"Sure, I bet Sergey would love having an extra girl around when he fucks me!" she grins. "Come on!"'
-	'You follow her into his room, and she was right; Sergey loves the idea! Sonia eagerly begins to suck his cock, and then offers it to you after a while: "Come on, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Get to work!"'
-	'Sonia notices your hesitance and puts her hand behind your head, gently but firmly guiding your head to his cock. "Go on, you''ll love it! I''ll help!"'
-	'You lick the shaft first, and then take the head of his cock in your mouth. Sonia gently strokes your hair, whispering encouraging words into your ear while you try to take more and more of his length inside your mouth. From time to time she assists you quite actively, sucking the head of his cock while you lick his balls, or licking one side of the shaft while you lick the other. At one point, you''re even trying to kiss one another with Sergey''s cock between your mouths!'
+	'You follow her into his room, and she was right; Sergey loves the idea! Sonia eagerly begins to suck his cock and then offers it to you after a while. "Come on, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Get to work!"'
+	'Sonia notices your hesitance and puts her hand behind your head, gently but firmly guiding it to his cock. "Go on, you''ll love it! I''ll help!"'
+	'You lick the shaft first and then take the head of his cock in your mouth. Sonia gently strokes your hair, whispering encouraging words into your ear while you try to take more and more of his length inside your mouth. From time to time, she assists you quite actively, sucking the head of his cock while you lick his balls or licking one side of the shaft while you lick the other. At one point, you''re even trying to kiss one another with Sergey''s cock between your mouths!'
 	'You manage to take most of him in, but you have to yield and pull away before your gag reflex takes over. Sonia and Sergey both smile at you proudly, that was great!'
-	'"Wow, <<$pcs_nickname>>", Sonia says with some admiration in her voice, "I thought I was good with my mouth, but you sure look like you could teach me a thing or two!"'
+	'"Wow, <<$pcs_nickname>>," Sonia says with some admiration in her voice, "I thought I was good with my mouth, but you sure look like you could teach me a thing or two!"'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat', 'group'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
@@ -312,8 +312,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'serg_sex':
 		'Sergey seems to have made his choice; he wants to fuck you first. He moves up behind you and rubs his hard cock against your pussy lips; the wetness of them combined with his precum make it feel very nice.'
 		'Sonia just watches as Sergey slowly pushes his dick further and further inside of you, idly rubbing her clit and massaging her boobs. Your pussy feels quite full when Sergey is all the way in, but it''s a good kind of full. A nice kind of full. Maybe you should visit Sergey more often...'
 		'When he slowly begins to thrust his cock in and out of you, you open your mouth and let out a soft moan. Sonia sees this as an invitation and grabs your hair, as she rubs her pussy against your lips eagerly. Her actions are making it perfectly clear: you''re supposed to service her with your mouth while you get fucked.'
-		'You do what is expected of you, and lick Sonia''s pussy as best you can. It''s fairly difficult, with Sergey fucking from behind at the same time, but you notice her breathing quickening and her biting her lip while she looks down at you. She looks rather cute when she''s squirming.'
-		'"Enjoying yourself over there, Sonia?" you teasingly ask between moans. Sonia grins mischievously, and punishes you by grabbing a firmer hold on your hair and roughly grinding her pussy against your mouth.'
+		'You do what is expected of you and lick Sonia''s pussy as best you can. It''s fairly difficult with Sergey fucking from behind at the same time, but you notice her breathing quickening and her biting her lip while she looks down at you. She looks rather cute when she''s squirming.'
+		'"Enjoying yourself over there, Sonia?" you teasingly ask between moans. Sonia grins mischievously and punishes you by grabbing a firmer hold on your hair and roughly grinding her pussy against your mouth.'
 		'Then Sergey decides it''s Sonia''s turn, and he makes her lie down on her back.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'group'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', -5, 'lesbian', 'sub', 'group'
@@ -328,11 +328,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'serg_sex':
 			'You have a devious grin on your face when you see Sonia in her current position. She forced you to lick her when Sergey fucked you... well, two can play that game!'
 			'Sergey groans as he enters Sonia, the wetness of her pussy definitely easing his access to her. You must''ve done a good job with your mouth, getting her that worked up.'
 			'"Your turn to service me, dear..." you smirk, right before you lower your hips over Sonia''s mouth before she can protest.'
-			'Sonia is too enthralled by the large dick fucking her snatch, and mostly just moans and groans into your pussy when you grind your groin against her face.'
-			'Sergey is railing her quite roughly now, and since Sonia is not doing a good job of pleasing you, you encourage him: "Fuck that pussy, Sergey! No need to hold back on this whore''s slit, she can take it! Pleasing you is what she''s made for!"'
-			'Suddenly Sonia becomes far more eager to please you, and you feel her tongue actively rubbing against your clit. You smirk when you realize why; Sonia must understand that you''re the reason why Sergey is fucking her so roughly, and is trying to please you so you''ll choose her side again.'
+			'Sonia is too enthralled by the large dick fucking her snatch and mostly just moans and groans into your pussy when you grind your groin against her face.'
+			'Sergey is railing her quite roughly now, and since Sonia is not doing a good job of pleasing you, you encourage him. "Fuck that pussy, Sergey! No need to hold back on this whore''s slit, she can take it! Pleasing you is what she''s made for!"'
+			'Suddenly, Sonia becomes far more eager to please you, and you feel her tongue actively rubbing against your clit. You smirk when you realize why; Sonia must understand that you''re the reason why Sergey is fucking her so roughly and must be trying to please you so you''ll choose her side again.'
 			$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'She does such a good job, she brings you to an orgasm before you can stop her. You loudly groan and your body trembles over hers, causing Sergey to give you some confused looks.'
+			$orgasm_txt = 'She does such a good job she brings you to an orgasm before you can stop her. You loudly groan, and your body trembles over hers, causing Sergey to give you some confused looks.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian', 'dom', 'group'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Continue':
@@ -343,10 +343,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'serg_sex':
 				pcs_hairbsh = 0
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/vanna/gr/ev1_4_'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'When Sergey is close to his orgasm, he stops fucking Sonia and orders the both of you to get down on your knees before him. Sergey readily puts his cock into Sonia''s mouth, and roars loudly as he drops his hot load of sperm onto her tongue.'
+				'When Sergey is close to his orgasm, he stops fucking Sonia and orders the both of you to get down on your knees before him. Sergey readily puts his cock into Sonia''s mouth and roars loudly as he drops his hot load of sperm onto her tongue.'
 				'Sonia swallows some of it, while you lick the sperm that she didn''t manage to swallow from Sergey''s cock and balls after he pulls out of Sonia''s mouth.'
 				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you horny minx!" Sonia exclaims. "I didn''t know you were such a slut for cum!"'
-				'You take Sergey''s cock in your hand and gently rub it, trying to milk the last bits of sperm out of him. Sonia kisses you greedily, and you taste Sergey''s sperm on her tongue when she does. When she breaks off the kiss, you lick her cheek. "Just cleaning up your face, you had some sperm there", you wink at her.'
+				'You take Sergey''s cock in your hand and gently rub it, trying to milk the last bits of sperm out of him. Sonia kisses you greedily, and you taste Sergey''s sperm on her tongue when she does. When she breaks off the kiss, you lick her cheek. "Just cleaning up your face, you had some sperm there," you wink at her.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finish': gt'shulgahall'