locations/AlbStars.qsrc

@@ -288,8 +288,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'starlets':
 			!! third rally in the park if sveta is dancing
 			if ((month > 9 and day > 20) or (month = 11 and day < 16)) and week > 5 and hour > 8 and hour < 20 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] = 2 and AlbinaQW['ParkRallyDay'] < daystart :  gt 'AlbStars', 'parkrally'
 
-			if AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  = 0 and AlbinaQW['StarletsWhore'] >= 8:
-				AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  = 1
+			if AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  = 0 and AlbinaQW['StarletsWhore'] >= 8:
+				AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  = 1
 				'At the end of the session, Albina beckons you to her. "I''ve been told to tell you that you''re doing good <<$pcs_nickname>> and that the clients are saying that you''re their new favourite girl. You''re handling it all quite well, but it will all be over soon. He won''t get away with it much longer. I promise."'
 				'You raise an eyebrow at her, but she just pats you on the shoulder and walks away before you can ask her who or what she is talking about.'
 			end

locations/Snpc.qsrc

@@ -227,7 +227,7 @@ if numnpc = 23:
 	! 	AlbinaQW['Friends'] = 2
 	! 	npc_rel['A23'] = 100
 	! 	'Albina smiles gratefully at you as she says: "Thank you <<$pcs_nickname>>! Like they say... a friend in need is a friend indeed. Your timely warning saved me, I had just enough time to get rid of all the evidence! Unfortunately we do have to stop with Albina''s Starlets, to keep ourselves out of trouble."'
-	! elseif AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  = 2 and AlbEnemy = 0:
+	! elseif AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  = 2 and AlbEnemy = 0:
 	! 	npc_rel['A23'] = 0
 	! 	AlbEnemy = 1
 	! 	'Albina angrily glares at you as she talks: "Cut the crap, bitch... I know what you did. You''ll regret this!"'

locations/albina_election_events.qsrc

@@ -63,7 +63,7 @@ $din_zajava_albfather = {
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		minut += 1
-		AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  = 2
+		AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  = 2
 		AlbinaQW['Chernov'] = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/chernov.jpg"></center>'
@@ -125,7 +125,7 @@ $din_zajava_albfather_no2 = {
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		minut += 1
-		AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  = -1
+		AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  = -1
 		AlbinaQW['Chernov'] = 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/chernov.jpg"></center>'

locations/brother.qsrc

@@ -644,7 +644,6 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sleepsexcum':
 
 	pose = 0
 	if sexcontra > 0: sexcontra = 0
-	$risk_boy = ''
 
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -838,6 +837,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuckvaginal':
 	gs 'dinsex','sexcum'
 
 	gs 'brother', 'brotherSexEnd'
+	killvar '$risk_boy'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'fuckanal':
@@ -1084,7 +1084,6 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'brother_sex_end':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
-	$risk_boy = ''
 	gs 'stat'
 	minut += rand(2,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/kolka/event/shower/shower.mp4"></center>'

locations/gschool_grounds.qsrc

@@ -302,7 +302,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 				'<TABLE BORDER=1><<$show_table>></TR></TABLE>'
 			end
 		end
-		if AlbinaQW['albride'] = 0 and AlbinaQW['RideDaystart'] <= daystart and AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  >= 1 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['Chernov'] > 0: 
+		if AlbinaQW['albride'] = 0 and AlbinaQW['RideDaystart'] <= daystart and AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  >= 1 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['Chernov'] > 0: 
 			'<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''albinaRide''">Albina Barlovskaya</a> is waiting behind the wheel of a large black SUV, parked near the school.'
 		end
 

locations/gschool_lessons4.qsrc

@@ -1290,8 +1290,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'shower2':
 				'As a large group of girls gather around to watch and film the show, you spot Christina trying to quietly slip out with the group of girls. She sees you looking at her and she stops in her tracks, her eyes fearfully pleading with you. You ignore her and mercilessly drag her into the middle of the room and throw her down next to Sonia. "I brought an extra bitch to the party!" you say mockingly to the laughter of the others. You waste no time and immediately present your pussy to Christina, spreading yourself wide and exposing your clit. She looks at you scornfully, but knowing that she has no choice, she reluctantly starts eating you out. "Come on slut, you can do better than that!" you say before you grab her hair and start grinding against her, smearing her face with your wetness as she keeps licking away at your clit. She seems to put more effort in and you slowly feel your orgasm building within you.'
 				$orgasm_txt = 'Just as you are about to climax, you pull her face out of your crotch and quickly rub your engorged clit, bringing yourself to an explosive orgasm as you spray a fountain of pussy juice across Christina''s face, much to the amazement and amusement of the other girls present.'
 				$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-				'When you finish cumming, you force her head back into your crotch, making her lick up every last drop of your juices. When you''re done, you pat her on the head and throw her to the floor for the other girls to have some fun with her. When everyone has had a turn, Sonia and Christina are both drenched in sticky girl cum. Christina is furious, but Sonia doesn''t care, instead focusing on fingering herself. You give Christina a mocking smile and leave her sitting there as you join the others in returning to the locker room to get dressed. She doesn''t resist, instead just sitting on the floor, dejected and defeated. She hasn''t returned to the locker room by the time you finish getting dressed and leave.'   
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', -8, 'lesbian', 'dom'
+				'When you finish cumming, you force her head back into your crotch, making her lick up every last drop of your juices. When you''re done, you pat her on the head and throw her to the floor for the other girls to have some fun with her. When everyone has had a turn, Sonia and Christina are both drenched in sticky girl cum. Christina is furious, but Sonia doesn''t care, instead focusing on fingering herself. You give Christina a mocking smile and leave her sitting there as you join the others in returning to the locker room to get dressed. She doesn''t resist, instead just sitting on the floor, dejected and defeated. She hasn''t returned to the locker room by the time you finish getting dressed and leave.'   
 				gs 'stat'
 				'You can choose another outfit while you''re here.'
 				act 'Finish dressing':

locations/pav_commercial.qsrc

@@ -55,13 +55,13 @@ end
 
 gs'street_event','pav_commercial', 'extras'
 
-if AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  >= 1 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] > 0:
+if AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  >= 1 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] > 0:
 	if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] = 0:AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] = totminut + 2880
 
 	'You can see election posters on the walls all over town. They say: "Vote for Boris Barlovsky!" Wait a minute... isn''t that Albina''s father?'
 end
 
-if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] <= totminut and hour >= 14 and AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  = 1:gt 'albina_election_events'
+if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] <= totminut and hour >= 14 and AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  = 1:gt 'albina_election_events'
 
 if StoryLine > 0 and hour < 4 and motherWorry = 0 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and age < 18 and home_owned[2] = 1:
 	motherWorry = 1

locations/pav_industrial.qsrc

@@ -47,13 +47,13 @@ end
 
 gs'street_event','pav_industrial', 'extras'
 
-if AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  >= 1 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] > 0:
+if AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  >= 1 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] > 0:
 	if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] = 0:AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] = totminut + 2880
 
 	'You can see election posters on the walls all over town. They say: "Vote for Boris Barlovsky!" Wait a minute... isn''t that Albina''s father?'
 end
 
-if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] <= totminut and hour >= 14 and AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  = 1:gt 'albina_election_events'
+if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] <= totminut and hour >= 14 and AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  = 1:gt 'albina_election_events'
 
 if rand(1,5) >= 4 and pav_slut >= 100:
 	if pav_slut < 150:

locations/pav_residential.qsrc

@@ -86,12 +86,12 @@ if pav_slut >= 250 and rand(1, 10) = 10 and pav_residential_prost_day ! daystart
 	exit
 end
 
-if AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  >= 1 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] > 0:
+if AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  >= 1 and AlbinaQW['ParkRally'] > 0:
 	if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] = 0:AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] = totminut + 2880
 	'<br>You can see election posters on the walls all over town. They say: "Vote for Boris Barlovsky!" Wait a minute... isn''t that Albina''s father?</br>'
 end
 
-if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] <= totminut and hour >= 14 and AlbinaQW['albina_election_events']  = 1:gt 'albina_election_events'
+if AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] > 0 and AlbinaQW['ElectionCampaignTime'] <= totminut and hour >= 14 and AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW']  = 1:gt 'albina_election_events'
 
 if rand(1, 5) >= 4 and pav_slut >= 150:
 	if pav_slut < 200:

locations/saveupdater.qsrc

@@ -494,7 +494,7 @@ if ((100*version_major +version_minor)*100+version_revision)*100+version_patch
 	! ----- Diner Bystroeshka (burger) story variables migrated to array
 
 	! ----- Albina story variables migrated to array
-	if AlbFather > 0:          AlbinaQW['albina_election_events'] = AlbFather & killvar 'AlbFather'
+	if AlbFather > 0:          AlbinaQW['AlbFatherQW'] = AlbFather & killvar 'AlbFather'
 	if AlbFrend > 0:           AlbinaQW['Friends'] = AlbFrend & killvar 'AlbFrend'
 	if ZvezdEnd > 0:           AlbinaQW['StarletsShutDown'] = ZvezdEnd & killvar 'ZvezdEnd'
 	if DanceWhore > 0:         AlbinaQW['StarletsWhore'] = DanceWhore & killvar 'DanceWhore'

locations/sbReksHome.qsrc

@@ -4,10 +4,9 @@ if indorf = 0 and (sisboyparty_day + 2 = daystart or hour > 21):
 	cls
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Rex''s Apartment</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_6_' + rand(1,5) + '.jpg"></center>'
-	*nl 'Drunk and disheveled, Anya bursts into the room. You noticed that her hair, and all over her clothes she is smeared in sticky sperm. Anya stopped you and said:' 
-	'"We should move our asses and go home <<$pcs_nickname>>, or mother will kill us both, if you don''t come home tonight."'
-	if Rex_save = 1 and Rex_Love = 0: 'As you leave the apartment, you gently kiss Rex on the cheek, thanking for the evening.'
-	if Rex_Love = 1: 'As you leave the apartment, you passionate kiss Rex on the lips, "Thank you for a lovely evening."'
+	*nl 'Drunk and disheveled, Anya bursts into the room. You notice that her hair and clothes are smeared all over in sticky sperm. Anya stops you and says, "We should move our asses and go home <<$pcs_nickname>>, or mother will kill us both, if you don''t come home tonight."'
+	if Rex_save = 1 and Rex_Love = 0: 'As you leave the apartment, you gently kiss Rex on the cheek, thanking him for the evening.'
+	if Rex_Love = 1: 'As you leave the apartment, you passionately kiss Rex on the lips. "Thank you for a lovely evening."'
 	if party_boys_in >= 1: 'As you leave the apartment, some drunk guys tell you they will miss you and sleep well, while laughing to each other.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -49,7 +48,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party':
 	sister_party_dom = 0
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_1_' + rand(1,5) + '.jpg"></center>'
-	'You arrive at Rex''s apartment, for the weekend party. Going inside with the others, the loud music drowned out any noise from outside. As soon as you are inside several boys immediately start offering you drinks.'
+	'You arrive at Rex''s apartment for the weekend party. Going inside with the others, the loud music drowns out any noise from outside. As soon as you are inside, several boys immediately start offering you drinks.'
 	act 'Drink':
 		cls
 		minut += 5
@@ -57,8 +56,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party':
 		gs 'drugs ', 'alcohol', 'vodka'
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_2_' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
-		'In all this mess you are unable to find a clean cup and are handed a full bottle of booze. Clinking glasses with the bottle, you put your lips to the mouth of the bottle and turn it up, gulping down several swigs of strong drink, noticing the effects almost at once.'
-		'The party has just begun, you can still walk through the apartment and find something to do.'
+		'In all this mess, you are unable to find a clean cup and are handed a full bottle of booze. Clinking glasses with the bottle, you put your lips to its mouth and turn it up, gulping down several swigs of strong drink, noticing the effects almost at once.'
+		'The party has just begun. You can still walk through the apartment and find something to do.'
 		act 'Move away': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_home'
 	end
 end
@@ -73,19 +72,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_home':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Rex''s Room</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_1_' + rand(1,5) + '.jpg"></center>'
-	'Sitting at a table and drinking with your friends, sitting to one side of you sharing a bottle as always is <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''lena''">Lena</a> who is always fun, her slightly more reserved friend <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''ira''">Ira</a>, and always up beat <a href="exec: gt ''reks'', ''party''">Rex</a>.'
-	'To your other side sits your sister <a href="exec: gt ''sister_party'', ''sister_party''">Anya</a> drinking already and <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''roma''">Roma</a>, whom himself sits just a bit away looking more serious than normal, plus lots of <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''party_girls''">girls</a> and <a href="exec: gt ''party_boys'', ''party_boys''">guys</a> you barely know.'
-	if alko < 3:'One of the guys offers you a bottle to <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''party_drink''">drink</a> from as they say "A little more to set the mood."'
+	'You sit at a table and drink with your friends. Sitting to one side of you sharing a bottle as always are <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''lena''">Lena</a> who is always fun, her slightly more reserved friend <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''ira''">Ira</a>, and always upbeat <a href="exec: gt ''reks'', ''party''">Rex</a>.'
+	'To your other side sits your sister <a href="exec: gt ''sister_party'', ''sister_party''">Anya</a>, drinking already, and <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''roma''">Roma</a>, who himself sits just a bit away looking more serious than normal, plus lots of <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''party_girls''">girls</a> and <a href="exec: gt ''party_boys'', ''party_boys''">guys</a> you barely know.'
+	if alko < 3:'One of the guys offers you a bottle to <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''party_drink''">drink</a> from as he says, "A little more to set the mood."'
 	!You''re drunk
 	if alko >= 3:
 		*clr
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Rex''s Room</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_party_home_1_' + rand(1,5) + '.jpg"></center>'
-		'After awhile everyone gets up to go dance and drink. Only a few <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''party_girls''">girls</a>, are left in the room, who are fun to hang out and gossip with.'
+		'After a while, everyone gets up to go dance and drink. Only a few <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''party_girls''">girls</a> are left in the room, but they are fun to hang out and gossip with.'
 		iif(party_girls_talk >= 2,'You <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''talk''">chat</a> and gossip with them. One of the girls pulls out some marijuana and invites all of you to <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''smoke''">have a smoke</a>.', 'You <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''talk''">chat</a> and gossip with them.')
 		if pcs_mood = 100 and pcs_horny >= 50 and girls_smoke > 1:
-			'All the girls are in a good mood, and several of them excited pull you with them to have some <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''fun''">fun</a>.'
+			'All the girls are in a good mood, and several of them excitedly pull you with them to have some <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''fun''">fun</a>.'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
@@ -97,7 +96,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roma':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Roma</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/roma/roma.jpg"></center>'
-	'Red-haired skinny guy named Roma'
+	'Red-haired skinny guy named Roma.'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
 
@@ -109,7 +108,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_drink':
 	gs 'drugs ', 'alcohol', 'vodka'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_2_' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
-	'Someone hands you a half full bottle of booze, putting your lips to the mouth of the bottle, you turn it up and gulp down several swigs of strong drink, noticing the effects almost at once.'
+	'Someone hands you a half full bottle of booze. Putting your lips to the mouth of the bottle, you turn it up and gulp down several swigs of strong drink, noticing the effects almost at once.'
 	'The party has just begun, you can still walk through the apartment and find something to do.'
 	act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
@@ -125,16 +124,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_gost':
 	if alko < 3:
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Living room</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_3.jpg"></center>'
-		'This is a large living room, hardly anyone is here, most are all still sitting in the other room talking and drinking. Only one <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''party_boy''">guy</a> is in here tinkering with a turntable.'
+		'This is a large living room. Hardly anyone is here, most are all still sitting in the other room talking and drinking. Only one <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''party_boy''">guy</a> is in here tinkering with a turntable.'
 	elseif alko >= 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/reksparty_4_' + rand(1,8) + '.jpg"></center>'
-		'The party is in full swing. In one corner a <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''party_boy''">guy</a> the party DJ is spinning the beats at the turntable. You want to give it a try and <a href="exec: gt ''dinParty'', ''dance''">spin some beats</a>.'
+		'The party is in full swing. In one corner. a <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''party_boy''">guy</a>, the party DJ, is spinning beats at the turntable. You want to give it a try and <a href="exec: gt ''dinParty'', ''dance''">spin some beats</a>.'
 		'<a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''roma''">Roma</a> and <a href="exec: gt ''sister_party'', ''sister_party''">Anya</a> are locked together having fun dancing.'
 		if Rex_Love = 0:'<a href="exec: gt ''reks'', ''party''">Rex</a> is having fun dancing with some <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''party_girls''">girls</a>.'
 		if Rex_Love = 1:'You are dancing with some <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''party_girls''">girls</a> and <a href="exec: gt ''reks'', ''party''">Rex</a>, who looks at you with loving eyes.'
 		'<a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''lena''">Lena</a> and <a href="exec: gt ''party_girls'', ''ira''">Ira</a> are having fun in the company of drunken <a href="exec: gt ''party_boys'', ''party_boys''">guys</a>.'
 	end
-	act 'Go to the Rex''s room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_home'
+	act 'Go to Rex''s room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_home'
 	act 'Go to the kitchen': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_kuh'
 	act 'Go to the bathroom': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_toilet'
 	act 'Leave Rex''s home': gt 'pav_commercial'
@@ -149,11 +148,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_boy':
 	if party_dj = 1 and dj_beer < 1:
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>DJ</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy.jpg"></center>'
-		'The guy messes with the soundboard and makes the sound even louder. "Hello, <<$pcs_nickname>>, get me a beer. You can find all the booze in the kitchen."'
+		'The guy messes with the soundboard and makes the sound even louder. "Hello, <<$pcs_nickname>>, get my friend and me a beer. You can find all the booze in the kitchen."'
 	elseif dj_beer = 1 and dj_thank < 1:
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>DJ</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy.jpg"></center>'
-		'The guy messes with the soundboard and makes the sound even louder. "Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, where is our beer?" You go into the kitchen, get two bottles of beer and <a href="exec:gt ''dinParty'', ''dj_beer''">bring</a> it to the guys.'
+		'The guy messes with the soundboard and makes the sound even louder. "Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, where are our beers?" You go into the kitchen, get two bottles of beer and <a href="exec:gt ''dinParty'', ''dj_beer''">bring</a> them to the guys.'
 	elseif dj_thank = 1 and dj_bad < 1:
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>DJ</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/party_boy.jpg"></center>'
@@ -186,9 +185,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_kuh':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Kitchen</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/kuh.jpg"></center>'
-	'The kitchen is spacious, but kinda dirty. The kitchen table is covered in cans and bottles of beer as well as 5th''s of booze. You can grab any bottle you want and <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''party_drink''">drink</a>.'
-	if party_dj =1 and dj_beer < 1:'You grab two bottles and <a href="exec: gt ''dinParty'', ''dj''">take</a> them for the DJ.'
-	if alko >= 3: 'Some <a href="exec: gt ''party_boys'', ''party_boys''">guys</a> bang their empty drinks down on the table, refilling they offer a cup to you and try to get you to <a href="exec: gt ''party_boys'', ''drink''">drink</a> with them.'
+	'The kitchen is spacious, but kinda dirty. The kitchen table is covered in cans and bottles of beer as well as 5ths of booze. You can grab any bottle you want and <a href="exec: gt ''sbReksHome'', ''party_drink''">drink</a>.'
+	if party_dj =1 and dj_beer < 1:'You grab two bottle for the <a href="exec: gt ''dinParty'', ''dj''">DJ and his friend</a>.'
+	if alko >= 3: 'Some <a href="exec: gt ''party_boys'', ''party_boys''">guys</a> bang their empty drinks down on the table. Refilling, they offer a cup to you and try to get you to <a href="exec: gt ''party_boys'', ''drink''">drink</a> with them.'
 	act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
 end
 
@@ -206,7 +205,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'party_toilet':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Toilet</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/toilet.jpg"></center>'
 
-	'Here you can wash your face, freshen up or touch up your make up at <a href="exec: gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirrors</a>.'
+	'Here you can wash your face, freshen up or touch up your make-up at <a href="exec: gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirrors</a>.'
 	if pcs_horny > 50:'Feeling yourself ready to burst with desire, you can''t take it anymore and begin to <a href="exec: gt ''dinParty'', ''toilet_mast''">masturbate</a>.'
 	act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sbReksHome', 'party_gost'
 	if cumloc[11] = 1 or cumloc[12] = 1:

locations/seeporn.qsrc

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 
 *clr & cla
 '<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/tv/seeporn.mp4"></video></center>'
-'You and the boys sit down around the TV, Kolka puts on a DVD and immediately the screen is filled with porn.'
+'You and the boys sit down around the TV. Kolka puts on a DVD, and immediately, the screen is filled with porn.'
 see_rand1 = rand(0,100)
 act 'Watch it':
 	cla
@@ -15,18 +15,18 @@ act 'Watch it':
 	if evgenQW >= 4 and pav_slut >= 150: gt 'seeporn','SeePornPalevo'
 
 	if seepornofut < 3:
-		'The boys are looking at what is going on the screen but they are clearly uneasy and embarrassed with you here.'
+		'The boys are looking at what is going on on the screen, but they are clearly uneasy and embarrassed with you here.'
 	elseif seepornofut >= 3 and seepornofut < 10:
 		'The guys have become accustomed to watching porn with you about, sometimes even commenting on what is happening.'
 	elseif seepornofut >= 10:
-		'The boys intensely watch the porn, you notice a distinct tightness in their pants.'
+		'The boys intensely watch the porn. You notice a distinct tightness in their pants.'
 
 		if evgenQW = 4:
 			*clr & cla
 			boyseeporn += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/tv/seeporn.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice that they are all clearly aroused. Zhendos asks "<<$pcs_nickname>>, Want to put that mouth of yours to use?"'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice that they are all clearly aroused. Zhendos asks, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, want to put that mouth of yours to use?"'
 
 			act 'Keep quiet':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -67,7 +67,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbbcum.jpg"></center>'
-					'The boys don''t last long and cum right in your face, Soon almost all of your face is covered in a layer of sperm and it''s dripping onto your clothes.'
+					'The boys don''t last long and cum right in your face. Soon, almost all of your face is covered in a layer of sperm, and it''s dripping onto your clothes.'
 
 					evgenrand = rand(1,5)
 
@@ -84,8 +84,8 @@ act 'Watch it':
 
 						gs 'stat'
 						'Kolka tells the guys that he should take you home.'
-						'As soon as you leave the school building your brother whispers; "Let''s look for a quiet place, I''m still horny."'
-						'Soon you find a secluded spot and Kolka says, "This looks good. Bend over."'
+						'As soon as you leave the school building, your brother whispers, "Let''s look for a quiet place, I''m still horny."'
+						'Soon, you find a secluded spot, and Kolka says, "This looks good. Bend over."'
 						if see_rand1 < 5:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/public/boysex.jpg"></center>'
 						if see_rand1 >= 5 and see_rand1 < 30:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/public/publ1,<<rand(0,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 						if see_rand1 >= 30:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/public/publ1,<<rand(0,6)>>.jpg"></center>'
@@ -119,7 +119,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/seeporn.jpg"></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice the bulges in their pants. Zhendos suddenly takes your hand and holds it against his groin, Mishan does the same with your other hand. Your brother Kolka laughs nervously. Mishan tells you conspiratorially "<<$pcs_nickname>>, wank us off."'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice the bulges in their pants. Zhendos suddenly takes your hand and holds it against his groin, and Mishan does the same with your other hand. Your brother Kolka laughs nervously. Mishan tells you conspiratorially, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, wank us off."'
 
 			act 'Jerk guys':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -132,7 +132,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 
 				if boyseeporn < 2:
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporn.hand1,<<rand(0,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'They get their cocks out and you gently rub both members with your hands, Zhendos quickly groans and lets fly a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately followed by Mishan who also manages to hit your foot.'
+					'They get their cocks out, and you gently rub both members with your hands. Zhendos quickly groans and lets fly a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately followed by Mishan, who also manages to hit your foot.'
 
 					act 'Eew':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -146,7 +146,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporncumhj.jpg"></center>'
-						'You shout "You assholes, all over my feet!" But the boys are blissfully sprawled on the couch "Great handjob <<$pcs_nickname>>, such small, soft hands."'
+						'You shout, "You assholes, all over my feet!" but the boys are blissfully sprawled on the couch. "Great handjob <<$pcs_nickname>>, such small, soft hands."'
 
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 					end
@@ -154,7 +154,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 					evgenQW = 4
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornfirst.jpg"></center>'
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbro0,<<rand(0,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'They get their cocks out and you gently rub both members with your hands, your brother Kolka walks over, his eyes filled with lust and puts his dick in your mouth. You eyes widened at this turn of events. Zhendos quickly groans and from his cock flys a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately followed by Mishan who also manages to hit your foot.'
+					'They get their cocks out, and you gently rub both members with your hands. Your brother Kolka walks over, his eyes filled with lust, and puts his dick in your mouth. Your eyes widen at this turn of events. Zhendos quickly groans, and from his cock flies a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately followed by one from Mishan, who also manages to hit your foot.'
 
 					act '"Groo gaskers!"':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -177,9 +177,9 @@ act 'Watch it':
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/facial22.jpg"></center>'
-						'Suddenly, your brother takes his dick out of your mouth a jet of hot cum splatters across your face.'
+						'Suddenly, your brother takes his dick out of your mouth, and a jet of hot cum splatters across your face.'
 						'Mishan laughs, "Kolka, you just fucked your sister in the mouth!"'
-						'Kolka wipes the sweat from his forehead, "Holy shit, I don''t fucking believe it! The slut was asking for it! No man could have resisted!"'
+						'Kolka wipes the sweat from his forehead. "Holy shit, I don''t fucking believe it! The slut was asking for it! No man could have resisted!"'
 						
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 					end
@@ -203,13 +203,13 @@ act 'Watch it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/seeporn.jpg"></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice the bulges in their pants. Zhendos suddenly takes your hand and holds it against his groin, Mishan does the same with your other hand. Your brother Kolka laughs nervously. Mishan Says conspiratorially "<<$pcs_nickname>>, wank us off."'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice the bulges in their pants. Zhendos suddenly takes your hand and holds it against his groin, and Mishan does the same with your other hand. Your brother Kolka laughs nervously. Mishan says conspiratorially, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, wank us off."'
 
 			act 'What the fuck?':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/seeporn.jpg"></center>'
-				'You shake your head. Mishan says "Come on, you''re a girl, it''s something good friends do for each other."'
+				'You shake your head. Mishan says, "Come on, you''re a girl, it''s something good friends do for each other."'
 				act 'Jerk them':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'arousal', 'hj', 10, 'group', 'sub'
@@ -219,7 +219,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 					evgenQW = 3
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/doublehj.mp4"></video></center>'
-					'They get there cocks out and you gently rub both members with your hands, Zhendos quickly groaned and his cock flew jet of sperm on your foot, immediately joined by Mishan and also finished on your foot.'
+					'They get there cocks out and you gently rub both members with your hands. Zhendos quickly groans, and his cock lets fly a jet of sperm onto your foot, immediately joined by one from Mishan, who also finishes on your foot.'
 
 					act 'Resent':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -233,7 +233,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 						gs 'cum_manage'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporncumhj.jpg"></center>'
-						'You shout "You assholes, all over my feet!" But the boys are blissfully sprawled on the couch "Great handjob <<$pcs_nickname>>, such small, soft hands."'
+						'You shout, "You assholes, all over my feet!" but the boys are blissfully sprawled on the couch. "Great handjob <<$pcs_nickname>>, such small, soft hands."'
 
 						act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 					end
@@ -257,8 +257,8 @@ act 'Watch it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/assgrab.jpg"></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice, their boners straining to get out of their pants.'
-			'You feel Zhendos hand gently stroking your ass.'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice their boners straining to get out of their pants.'
+			'You feel Zhendos''s hand gently stroking your ass.'
 
 			gs 'willpower', 'foreplay', 'resist', 'medium'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -267,7 +267,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 					gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/fuckoff2.jpg"></center>'
-					'You angrily remove Zhendos hand from your ass.'
+					'You angrily remove Zhendos''s hand from your ass.'
 					act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 				end
 			else
@@ -280,7 +280,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/assgrab.jpg"></center>'
-				'You sit on the couch turning red as a lobster enjoying having your butt rubbed.'
+				'You sit on the couch turning red as a lobster, enjoying having your butt rubbed.'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 			end
@@ -290,8 +290,8 @@ act 'Watch it':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/tv/seeporn.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'The boys intensely watch porn, you notice, their boners straining to get out of their pants.'
-			'Zhendos looking at the porn asks you "Have you ever done that, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+			'The boys intensely watch porn. You notice, their boners straining to get out of their pants.'
+			'Zhendos, looking at the porn, asks you, "Have you ever done that, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 
 			gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'medium'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -311,7 +311,7 @@ act 'Watch it':
 				evgenQW = 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/seeporn_umm.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You swallow and remain silent watching the porn. Mishan chuckles "And now she''s all flushed. It turns out the girls like porn as well."'
+				'You swallow and remain silent, watching the porn. Mishan chuckles, "And now she''s all flushed. It turns out the girls like porn as well."'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 			end
@@ -329,7 +329,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 	bratrand = RAND(0,1)
 	!boyseeporn += 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/tv/seeporn.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'The boys watch porn and whisper to each other, casting lustful glances at you'
+	'The boys watch porn and whisper to each other, casting lustful glances at you.'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	if bratrand = 0:
@@ -337,7 +337,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 		boyseeporn += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 
-		'Zhendos suggests "<<$pcs_nickname>>, How about putting that mouth to work? Kolka told us how you entertained the guys in the park so there''s no need to act all innocent. Unless of course you want everyone to know."'
+		'Zhendos suggests, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, how about putting that mouth to work? Kolka told us how you entertained the guys in the park, so there''s no need to act all innocent. Unless of course, you want everyone to know."'
 
 		act 'Say nothing':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -345,8 +345,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 
 			if see_rand1 < 30:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornblowbang.jpg"></center>'
 			if see_rand1 >= 30:'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbro0,<<rand(0,2)>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'Your silence is taken as consent, Zhendos gets his dick out and pulls your face toward it, you dutifully wrapped your lips around it and began to suck.'
-			'Your brother Kolka and Mishan also get their members out and stand around you, you start to masturbate and suck dick. You find the unusual and awkward situation a little exciting.'
+			'Your silence is taken as consent. Zhendos gets his dick out and pulls your face toward it, and you dutifully wrap your lips around it and begin to suck.'
+			'Your brother Kolka and Mishan also get their members out and stand around you. You start to masturbate and suck dick. You find the unusual and awkward situation a little exciting.'
 
 			act 'Suck':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -384,7 +384,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 				gs 'stat'
 
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbbcum.jpg"></center>'
-				'The boys don''t last long and cum right in your face, Soon almost all of your face is covered in a layer of sperm and it''s dripping on to your clothes. The boys laugh "That''s right, good girl".'
+				'The boys don''t last long and cum right in your face. Soon, almost all of your face is covered in a layer of sperm, and it''s dripping onto your clothes. The boys laugh, "That''s right, good girl".'
 
 				act 'Escape':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 			end
@@ -394,14 +394,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 			*clr & cla
 			BrotherNo = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/fuckoff2.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Fuck off, who would believe you." Your brother looks at you then says to Zhendos "Better luck next time."'
+			'"Fuck off, who would believe you." Your brother looks at you then says to Zhendos, "Better luck next time."'
 
 			act 'Escape':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 		end
 	elseif bratrand = 1:
 
 		'Zhendos suggests, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, are you going to serve us like you did with the kids in the park? Want to see if you can take two cocks in your mouth?"'
-		'You realise, your brother could not resist and told his friends. Hopefully only them.'
+		'You realise your brother could not resist and told his friends. Hopefully only them.'
 
 		act 'You can manage two little ones':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -409,7 +409,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporndouble.jpg"></center>'
 			'You dutifully kneel in front of the guys, grab their hard dicks and start to push them into your mouth.'
-			'"I told you that she would take it in the mouth like a pro, and you didn''t believe me", your brother laughs.'
+			'"I told you that she would take it in the mouth like a pro, and you didn''t believe me," your brother laughs.'
 
 			act 'Suck':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -418,7 +418,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seeporndouble2.jpg"></center>'
 				'You diligently continue to suck two dicks at the same time, the guys moaning and moving their hips trying to shove them into you deeper.'
 				'Your brother is looking at you closely and with his hand down his pants, while loudly telling details about what a dirty whore you are.'
-				'Just as you feel that this situation is beginning to slow you. You unzip your brothers pants and start alternate between his cock on its own and both of his friends at the same time.'
+				'Just as you feel that this situation is beginning to slow, you unzip your brother''s pants and start alternate between his cock on its own and both of his friends at the same time.'
 				'The boys don''t last long and almost simultaneously finish on your face. Seen too much damn porn, juvenile perverts.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'group', 'incest', 'sub'
 
@@ -446,9 +446,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/seeporn/sex/seepornbjcum<<rand(2,3)>>.jpg"></center>'
-					'Doing nothing but close your eyes, you sit humbly on your knees, without disturbing them while they cum. Then it hits you, the pungent smell of sperm.'
-					'You feel like a hot sticky goo covers your entire face, individual droplets fall on to your neck and hair.'
-					'"This is for you, instead of face masks", laugh the boys. Real funny, you wipe your eyes and angrily stare at them.'
+					'Doing nothing but close your eyes, you sit humbly on your knees without disturbing them while they cum. Then it hits you, the pungent smell of sperm.'
+					'You feel like a hot sticky goo covers your entire face, individual droplets falling onto your neck and hair.'
+					'"This is for you, instead of face masks," laugh the boys.'
+					'"Real funny." You wipe your eyes and angrily stare at them.'
 
 					act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 				end
@@ -462,7 +463,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SeePornPalevo':
 				BrotherNo = 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/disgust.jpg"></center>'
-				'You indignantly reject the kids. Your brother looks at you and announces "Probably for the best, your tiny peckers would only count as one cock."'
+				'You indignantly reject the kids. Your brother looks at you and announces, "Probably for the best, your tiny peckers would only count as one cock."'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 			end

locations/sergeihunter.qsrc

@@ -8,7 +8,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 	if huntersSergeiLove > 0 and pcs_horny <= 60 and huntersSergeisex = 0  and rand(0,2) = 0:
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterlove1.4.jpg"></center>'
-		'You went to Sergei to spend time together, but instead he kisses you and playfully bites on your lip.'
+		'You go to Sergei to spend time together, but instead, he kisses you and playfully bites on your lip.'
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want you," he whispers after the kiss.'
 		huntersSergeisex += rand(9,30)
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
@@ -38,9 +38,9 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 		'<center><b><font color = maroon>Sergei</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big174.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'Sergei is a friend of Andrei and Igor, and a member of the group of hunters that frequent the woods and swamp by Gadukino. He''s <<boyage>> years old. He is married and lives in the City Center...'
+		'Sergei is a friend of Andrei and Igor, and a member of the group of hunters that frequents the woods and swamp by Gadukino. He''s <<boyage>> years old. He is married and lives in the City Center...'
 		if huntersSergeiQw < 0:
-			'You and him have a bad relationship, because you offended him in the past.'
+			'You and him have a bad relationship because you offended him in the past.'
 		elseif huntersSergeiQw < 10:
 			'You have a normal relationship with him.'
 		elseif huntersSergeiQw < 20:
@@ -60,7 +60,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/talk1.'+rand(1,3)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			if huntersSergeiQw >= 0:'You spend some time chatting with Sergei, listening to interesting stories from his life and telling some stories of your own.'
-			if huntersSergeiQw < 0:'You talk with Sergei. He seems uncomfortable, but doesn''t force you away.'
+			if huntersSergeiQw < 0:'You talk with Sergei. He seems uncomfortable but doesn''t force you away.'
 			minut += 30
 			if huntersSergeiQw < 10:huntersSergeiQw += 1
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 				act 'Flirt':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterflirt1.'+rand(1,3)+'.jpg"></center>'
-					*nl 'You flirt playfully with Sergei. He is glad for your company, though he can'' stop himself from letting his eyes wander.'
+					*nl 'You flirt playfully with Sergei. He is glad for your company, though he can''t stop himself from letting his eyes wander.'
 					minut += 5
 					!!not using arousal as no orgasm chance
 					pcs_horny += 10
@@ -84,17 +84,17 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 
 
 					if huntersSergeiQw >= 30 and huntersKnowSlut = 0 and pcs_apprnc >= 60:
-						act 'Continue Flirt':
+						act 'Continue flirting':
 							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss1.jpg"></center>'
-							*nl 'Suddenly he cups your chin in his hand and gives you a kiss full of passion.'
+							*nl 'Suddenly, he cups your chin in his hand and gives you a kiss full of passion.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 							gs 'stat'
 
 							act 'Answer kiss':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss2.jpg"></center>'
-								*nl 'You''ve been waiting for this and respond just as passionately. Sergei keeps kissing you and you are right there with him, returning every kiss.'
+								*nl 'You''ve been waiting for this and respond just as passionately. Sergei keeps kissing you, and you are right there with him, returning every kiss.'
 								huntersSergeiLove = 1
 								huntersSergeiQw += 1
 								pcs_mood = 100
@@ -105,7 +105,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 									act'Further':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss3.jpg"></center>'
-										*nl '"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want to make love to you," he says, when he finally pulls back. You answer Sergei with a kiss every bit as passionate as the one that started this. You begin to make your way back towards his room as you do so.'
+										*nl '"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want to make love to you," he says when he finally pulls back. You answer Sergei with a kiss every bit as passionate as the one that started this. You begin to make your way back towards his room as you do so.'
 										minut += 5
 										gs 'stat'
 
@@ -115,7 +115,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 									act'Continue':
 										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss3.jpg"></center>'
-										*nl '"That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>," Sergei said, when your lips finally parted. You see a look that clearly shows he wishes for more and smile.'
+										*nl '"That was great <<$pcs_nickname>>," Sergei says when your lips finally part. You see a look that clearly shows he wishes for more and smile.'
 										minut += 5
 										gs 'stat'
 
@@ -126,7 +126,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 							act 'Move away':
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/speak_to_the_hand.jpg"></center>'
-								*nl '"Sorry, Sergei, but this isn''t what I wanted", you say. He leaves with an angry look on his face.'
+								*nl '"Sorry, Sergei, but this isn''t what I wanted," you say. He leaves with an angry look on his face.'
 								minut += 5
 								huntersSergeiQw -= 50
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -170,7 +170,7 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 					act 'Break up with Sergei':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/brosila.jpg"></center>'
-						*nl '"Sergei the passion is gone", you say, "I think it''s time we parted." You leave without looking back.'
+						*nl '"Sergei, the passion is gone," you say, "I think it''s time we parted." You leave without looking back.'
 						minut += 5
 						huntersSergeiLove = 0
 						huntersSergeiQw -= 100
@@ -181,36 +181,28 @@ if huntersSergeiLove = 0 or (huntersSergeiQw >= 10 and huntersSergeiQw <= 50):
 				end
 			end
 		end
-		act'Depart':gt $loc, $loc_arg
+		act 'Depart':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	end
 else
+	*clr & cla
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/brosil.jpg"></center>'
+	*nl
 	if huntersSergeiQw < 10:
-		*clr & cla
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/brosil.jpg"></center>'
-		*nl
-		'You wanted to talk to Sergei, but he beat you to it, and started speaking before you could get a word in.'
-		'<<$pcs_nickname>>, I realized that our relationship had no future, and we need to stop seeing each other, " he said, and trying not to look in your direction, resolutely walked away.'
-		'"Well, maybe it''s for the best, " you think, as you leave in the other direction.'
-		minut += 5
-		huntersSergeiLove = 0
+		'You want to talk to Sergei, but he beats you to it and starts speaking before you can get a word in.'
+		'<<$pcs_nickname>>, I realized that our relationship has no future and we need to stop seeing each other, " he says and, trying not to look in your direction, resolutely walks away.'
+		'"Well, maybe it''s for the best," you think as you leave in the other direction.'
 		huntersSergeiQw -= 10
-		gs 'stat'
-
-		act 'Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	else
-		*clr & cla
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/brosil.jpg"></center>'
-		*nl
-		'You wanted to talk to Sergei, but before you say anything he speaks instead.'
-		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I realized that our relationship has no future. You''re passion is unmatched, but I really love my family. I can''t risk that for you, " he says. He turns and walks away without saying another word, nor giving you time to say anything.'
-		'"Well, that''s how you feel is it?" you think as you stand there stunned. "Although this is probably for the best since he was married." you conclude before walking away.'
-		minut += 5
-		huntersSergeiLove = 0
+		'You want to talk to Sergei, but before you say anything, he speaks instead.'
+		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I realized that our relationship has no future. Your passion is unmatched, but I really love my family. I can''t risk that for you," he says. He turns and walks away without saying another word nor giving you time to say anything.'
+		'"Well, that''s how you feel is it?" you think as you stand there stunned. "Although, this is probably for the best since he is married," you conclude before walking away.'
 		huntersSergeiQw -= 50
-		gs 'stat'
-
-		act 'Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	end
+	minut += 5
+	huntersSergeiLove = 0
+	gs 'stat'
+
+	act 'Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
 
 --- sergeihunter ---------------------------------

locations/serpent.qsrc

@@ -10,13 +10,13 @@ if findneck = 1:
 	cls
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/gadukino/serpent/serpentintro.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You hear a whispered word coming from somewhere in the barn. "Ahhhh, I sseee the little fae mortal hasss s found my horcrux. You hold in your handsss my greatessst prizzzzze." You look around for who is talking, but don''t see anyone in the barn with you.'
-	'"Let usss make a deal, you and I. You return my prizzzze and I will teeeach you muccch about the magicssss you possssessss." You hear a scrapping sound coming from above you in the shadowy rafters.'
-	'"Who are you ? Where are you?" you yell. Looking for the owner of the strange sibilant voice.'
-	'"I am Zzathrezzz. Lord of Ssserpentsss." as the voice continues from above you see a large snake emerge out of the shadows. Outside the barn you hear Bandit start to loudly bark. Zathrez hisses in anoyance.'
+	'You hear a whispered word coming from somewhere in the barn. "Ahhhh, I sseee the little fae mortal hasss s found my horcrux. You hold in your handsss my greatessst prizzzzze." You look around for who is talking but don''t see anyone in the barn with you.'
+	'"Let usss make a deal, you and I. You return my prizzzze, and I will teeeach you muccch about the magicssss you possssessss." You hear a scraping sound coming from above you in the shadowy rafters.'
+	'"Who are you? Where are you?" you yell, looking for the owner of the strange sibilant voice.'
+	'"I am Zzathrezzz, Lord of Ssserpentsss." As the voice continues from above, you see a large snake emerge out of the shadows. Outside the barn, you hear Bandit start to loudly bark. Zathrez hisses in annoyance.'
 	'"That dog isss a noicccenccce!"'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/serpent/serpent1_0.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Now, do we deal?" the sibilant voice continues.'
+	'"Now, do we have a deal?" the sibilant voice continues.'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr: