locations/bordel.qsrc

@@ -53,22 +53,31 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brothel':
 		end
 	end
 
-	if func('bordel', 'is_open'):
-		act 'Go to the reception room and wait for customers':
-
-			if (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) or cumloc[11] = 1 or pcs_makeup < 2 or pcs_leghair > 3 or pcs_pubes > 3 or sweat > 25 or pcs_hairbsh = 0:
-				cla
-				'The brothel madam comes over to you and says, "Our customers expect you to be clean, shaven, made-up and with your hair looking nice. Go and sort yourself out, now!"'
-
-				act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'bordel', 'dysh'
-			elseif $clothingworntype ! 'fancy_burlesque' and PCloStyle ! 4 and $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
-				cla
-				'You need to wear an outfit that can be used for prostitution. If you haven''t got anything suitable and you are desperate, you could work naked, but you will get paid less and might get treated badly.'
-				'You can change your clothes in the bathroom.'
-
-				act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'bordel', 'dysh'
-			else
-				gt 'bordel', 'var'
+	if func('bordel', 'is_open') = 0:
+		'The brothel is closed for the night however, so you won''t be able to work now regardless.'
+	else
+		if borsexkol >= 2:
+			!! borsexkol is reset in cikl, meaning that it is reset at midnight, not when the brothel
+			!! opens or closes. if this is not desired behavior, will need to handle resetting this var
+			!! in brothel specific code.
+			'You have already hit this limit, so you won''t be able to work again until midnight.'
+		else
+			act 'Go to the reception room and wait for customers':
+
+				if (cumloc[6] = 1 or cumloc[7] = 1) or cumloc[11] = 1 or pcs_makeup < 2 or pcs_leghair > 3 or pcs_pubes > 3 or sweat > 25 or pcs_hairbsh = 0:
+					cla
+					'The brothel madam comes over to you and says, "Our customers expect you to be clean, shaven, made-up and with your hair looking nice. Go and sort yourself out, now!"'
+
+					act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'bordel', 'dysh'
+				elseif $clothingworntype ! 'fancy_burlesque' and PCloStyle ! 4 and $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
+					cla
+					'You need to wear an outfit that can be used for prostitution. If you haven''t got anything suitable and you are desperate, you could work naked, but you will get paid less and might get treated badly.'
+					'You can change your clothes in the bathroom.'
+
+					act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'bordel', 'dysh'
+				else
+					gt 'bordel', 'var'
+				end
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -112,7 +121,6 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
     $location_type = 'event'
 	menu_off = 1
-	if borsexkol >= 2:gt 'bordel', 'brothel'
 	if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 		bordelpay = 8
 	else
@@ -121,6 +129,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
 	gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'Client', rand(18,40)
 	gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated
 	minut += 30
+	gs 'stat'
 	borrand = rand(0, 10)
 
 	if borrand = 0:
@@ -276,11 +285,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'var':
 			gs 'boyStat', $npclastgenerated,'2'
 			gt 'paysex', 'start'
 		end
-	elseif borrand > 4:
-		'You are not chosen.'
-
+	else
 		act 'Go to your room':gt 'bordel', 'brothel'
-		act 'Wait for another':gt 'bordel', 'var'
+		if func('bordel', 'is_open'):
+			'You are not chosen.'
+			act 'Wait for another':gt 'bordel', 'var'
+		else
+			'You are not chosen, and the brothel is now closed.'
+		end
+	end
+
+	if borrand <= 4 and func('bordel', 'is_open') = 0:
+		'The brothel is closing now, so this is your last chance to work today.'
 	end
 end
 

locations/shoplifting.qsrc

@@ -15,15 +15,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'city':
 		picrand = rand(0,7)
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/steal<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'Standing in front make-up section of the supermarket. You nervously look over your shoulder to make sure none of the employees are able to spot you.'
+		'Standing in front of the make-up section of the supermarket, you nervously look over your shoulder to make sure none of the employees are able to spot you.'
 		'Seeing no one, you casually reach out for the make-up you usually use and tuck it away...'
-		'After looking around the cosmetic section for a while more you decide it''s time to make your escape.'
+		'After looking around the cosmetic section for a while more, you decide it''s time to make your escape.'
 
 		act 'Leave the store':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/leave.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Okay <<$pcs_nickname>>, just act normal..." you sigh quietly as you step towards the exit, trying to not draw any attention towards you.'
+			'"Okay <<$pcs_nickname>>, just act normal..." you sigh quietly as you step towards the exit, trying to not draw any attention towards yourself.'
 			'Don''t panic...'
 			'Walk casually...'
 			'Almost there...'
@@ -35,10 +35,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'city':
 			if ((pcs_observ+pcs_persuas > 50) and (hour = 12 or hour = 17)) or pcs_observ+pcs_persuas > 150 or rand(0,4) > 0:
 				!if observation and persuasion = sufficient: and certain time of the day (when the store is full with people)
 				kosmetica += 50
-				'As you walk by the counters and leave the supermarket you feel a rush of excitement. You''re almost there now, feeling relieved as well as triumphant. You''re going to make it, for sure!'
+				'As you walk by the counters and leave the supermarket, you feel a rush of excitement. You''re almost there now, feeling relieved as well as triumphant. You''re going to make it for sure!'
 				'You feel your hands trembling in your pockets, getting worse with every step. No matter what you do, you can''t shake the feeling that someone must''ve spotted you... surely they''ve spotted you!'
-				'You desperately try to calm yourself down with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you, so far... maybe you got lucky?'
-				'Before you know it you''re standing outside, having managed to get away with all kinds of loot. You turn back one last time to make sure that no one is following you.'
+				'You desperately try to calm yourself down as with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you so far... maybe you got lucky?'
+				'Before you know it, you''re standing outside, having managed to get away with your loot. You turn back one last time to make sure that no one is following you.'
 
 				act 'Keep on walking':gt 'torgcentr'
 
@@ -46,15 +46,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'city':
 				!elseif observation, persuasion and running level = sufficient and certain time of day (less people around):
 				!ADD COOLDOWN ON ATTEMPT TO STEAL, TWO WEEKS
 				'You feel your hands trembling in your pockets, getting worse with every step. No matter what you do, you can''t shake the feeling that someone must''ve spotted you... surely they''ve spotted you!'
-				'You desperately try to calm yourself down with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you, so far... maybe you got lucky?'
-				'You nervously look around making sure there isn''t anyone following you as you pass the counter. All of a sudden you see a guard appear and is walking towards you...'
+				'You desperately try to calm yourself down as with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you so far... maybe you got lucky?'
+				'You nervously look around, making sure there isn''t anyone following you as you pass the counter. All of a sudden, you see a guard appear and walk towards you...'
 
 				act 'Try to escape':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 10
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/running.jpg"></center>'
-					'Realizing he''s out after you, and not wanting to get caught you make a dash for it. You can''t get caught for a small thing like this.'
+					'Realizing he''s out after you and not wanting to get caught, you make a dash for it. You can''t get caught for a small thing like this.'
 
 					if pcs_run > 70:
 						!if running skills are over a certain level, higher than the first check
@@ -62,26 +62,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'city':
 						run_exp += 5
 						!Boost the stats observation and running by 1
 						kosmetica += 50
-						'You keep running while the security guard is closely following you... You turn a corner and then quickly take another corner as you try to shake him off...'
-						'The guard is not easily giving up but after a few minutes you''ve managed to outrun him as you make your escape from the supermarket. You can hear the guard screaming behind you...'
+						'You keep running while the security guard follows close behind... You turn a corner and then quickly take another corner as you try to shake him off...'
+						'The guard is not easily giving up, but after a few minutes, you''ve managed to outrun him as you make your escape from the supermarket. You can hear the guard screaming behind you...'
 
 						act 'Catch your breath':gt 'city_center'
 
 					else
 						shlif_caught += 1
 						!ADD 1 TO THE CAUGHT COUNTER
-						'You keep running while the security guard is closely following you... You turn a corner and then quickly take another corner as you try to shake him off...'
-						'But the guard is not easily giving up and as you turn the corner you reach a dead-end. You quickly try to turn around and run another way but it''s too late as you''re tackled.'
-						'Laying on the ground the security guard quickly lifts you up and leads you toward the security room.'
+						'You keep running while the security guard follows close behind... You turn a corner and then quickly take another corner as you try to shake him off...'
+						'But the guard is not easily giving up, and as you turn the corner, you reach a dead-end. You quickly try to turn around and run another way but it''s too late as you''re tackled.'
+						'Lying on the ground, the security guard quickly lifts you up and leads you toward the security room.'
 
 						act 'Get lead to the security room':gt 'shoplifting', 'securityroom'
 					end
 				end
 			else
 				'You feel your hands trembling in your pockets, getting worse with every step. No matter what you do, you can''t shake the feeling that someone must''ve spotted you... surely they''ve spotted you!'
-				'You desperately try to calm yourself down with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you, so far... maybe you got lucky?'
-				'You pass by the counter and seeing no one reacting you relax for a bit and let down your guard. Just as you''re about to leave through the entrance you feel a hand grab you by the shoulder.'
-				'You instantly turn around seeing a security guard is holding you and drags you back inside. Before you''re even able to speak up he is forcefully leading back to his office.'
+				'You desperately try to calm yourself down as with every step you get closer to the exit. No one seems to be stopping you so far... maybe you got lucky?'
+				'You pass by the counter, and seeing no one reacting, you relax for a bit and let down your guard. Just as you''re about to leave through the entrance, you feel a hand grab you by the shoulder.'
+				'You instantly turn around, seeing a security guard is holding you and dragging you back inside. Before you''re even able to speak up, he is forcefully leading you back to his office.'
 
 				act 'Get dragged into the back room':gt 'shoplifting', 'securityroom'
 			end
@@ -101,23 +101,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'securityroom':
 	shplft_value = 1300
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/caught.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Where are you taking me?" you shout out, "I haven''t done anything wrong!" you look around trying to catch someone''s attention. People are staring at you in disgust and turning their heads.'
-	'The security guard is keeping quiet as he forcefully pushes you away from the supermarket. You go through a dark hallway and stop at a door which he locks up and pushes you inside the room.'
-	'He orders you to take a seat on a basic chair and you quietly comply...'
-	'He sits down next to you and lets out a deep sigh, "You might as well admit we have you on tape that you''ve stolen..."'
+	'"Where are you taking me?" you shout out, "I haven''t done anything wrong!" You look around trying to catch someone''s attention. People are staring at you in disgust and turning their heads.'
+	'The security guard keeps quiet as he forcefully pushes you away from the supermarket. You go through a dark hallway and stop at a door, which he unlocks before pushing you inside.'
+	'He orders you to take a seat on a basic chair, and you quietly comply...'
+	'He sits down next to you and lets out a deep sigh, "You might as well admit what you''ve done. We have you on tape stealing..."'
 
 	act 'Admit':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You hang your head in discouragement that you''ve been caught. Your eyes tear up with crocodile tears as you try to come up with a way to get out of it, "I admit I''ve stolen..."'
-		'The guard clears his throat, "Well, that''s a start... Now I just need to go and have a talk to the store manager on how we''ll deal with you..."'
-		'Pleadingly you look at him, "Can''t we work something out? Do you really have to go and talk to the manager?"'
-		'Looking at you the security guard starts pondering and after a short moment he speaks up, "So what would you be able to offer me?"'
+		'You hang your head in resignation, realizing there''s no denying that you''ve been caught. Your eyes tear up with crocodile tears as you try to come up with a way to get out of this, "I admit I''ve stolen..."'
+		'The guard clears his throat, "Well, that''s a start... Now I just need to go and have a talk with the store manager on how we''ll deal with you..."'
+		'Pleadingly, you look at him, "Can''t we work something out? Do you really have to go and talk to the manager?"'
+		'Looking at you, the security guard starts pondering, and after a short moment, he speaks up, "So what would you be able to offer me?"'
 
 		act 'Masturbate for him': gt 'shoplifting', 'show'
 		act 'Offer him relief': gt 'shoplifting', 'bj'
-		if pcs_money >= 5000: act 'Offer a bribe (5000<b>₽</b>)': gt 'shoplifting', 'bribe'
+		if pcs_money >= 5000: act 'Offer a bribe (5000 <b>₽</b>)': gt 'shoplifting', 'bribe'
 		act 'Keep quiet': gt 'shoplifting', 'quiet'
 	end
 
@@ -128,16 +128,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'securityroom':
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You defyingly tell him that he''s grabbed the wrong person and that you have no idea what he''s talking about.'
-			'"Listen here, girl. We''ve got you on tape as you''ve shoplifted..." he proudly boasts.'
-			'You know you''ve been caught buy you keep on sticking to you story, "That can be whoever on that tape, how can you prove that''s me?"'
-			'The security guard chuckles, "Don''t worry about that. I''ll go and get the manager and then we''ll see what he decides to do with you..."'
+			'You defiantly tell him that he''s grabbed the wrong person and that you have no idea what he''s talking about.'
+			'"Listen here, girl. We''ve got you on tape as you shoplifted..." he proudly boasts.'
+			'You know you''ve been caught, but you keep on sticking to you story, "That could be whoever on that tape, how can you prove that''s me?"'
+			'The security guard chuckles, "Don''t worry about that. I''ll go and get the manager, and then we''ll see what he decides to do with you..."'
 			'"Wait!" you squeal, "We don''t need to get him involved..."'
 			'The security guard crosses his hands, "So what possibly could you offer me?"'
 
 			act 'Masturbate for him': gt 'shoplifting', 'show'
 			act 'Offer him relief': gt 'shoplifting', 'bj'
-			if pcs_money >= 5000: act 'Offer a bribe (5000<b>₽</b>)': gt 'shoplifting', 'bribe'
+			if pcs_money >= 5000: act 'Offer a bribe (5000 <b>₽</b>)': gt 'shoplifting', 'bribe'
 			act 'Keep quiet': gt 'shoplifting', 'quiet'
 		end
 	else
@@ -152,8 +152,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show1.jpg"></center>'
 	'"How about a little show? I''ll help you get off, and you can even direct me on how the show will carry on..." you desperately proclaim.'
 	'The security guard stops, pondering about it for a moment... All of a sudden you can see him smirking, "And you''ll follow my instructions to the latter?"'
-	'You nod and slyly smile giving into the fantasy that you''re going to be entirely subdued by him...'
-	'"Fine, let''s begin then." he excitingly exclaims, "Stand up and let me take a look at you. I want you to tease yourself for a while, I love seeing girls getting off."'
+	'You nod and slyly smile, giving into the fantasy that you''re going to be entirely subdued by him...'
+	'"Fine, let''s begin then," he excitingly exclaims, "Stand up and let me take a look at you. I want you to tease yourself for a while, I love seeing girls getting off."'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -162,9 +162,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You comply and stand up, pressed against the wall, he begins grabbing your clothes wanting to remove them. While he''s doing this you hear him say, "I want you to touch yourself." You prepare yourself by taking a deep breath and slowly slide down your hand towards your panties. As you finally reach the clit, you slowly begin touching it, biting your lip as your body reacts to the soft touches.'
-		'The security guard is satisfyingly observing you, rubbing his cock throughout his pants. He''s clearly aroused and you fear a bit what might come next, but you manage to keep focus as you know this will seal your faith.'
-		'"Wonder if your panties are soaked yet, girl?" he asks.'
+		'You comply and stand up, pressing yourself against the wall. He begins grabbing your clothes, wanting to remove them. While he''s doing this, you hear him say, "I want you to touch yourself." You prepare yourself by taking a deep breath and slowly slide your hand down towards your panties. As you finally reach your clit, you slowly begin touching it, biting your lip as your body reacts to the soft touches.'
+		'The security guard is observing you satisfied, rubbing his cock throughout his pants. He''s clearly aroused, and you fear a bit what might come next, but you manage to keep focus as you know this will determine your fate.'
+		'"I wonder, are your panties soaked yet, girl?" he asks.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -173,9 +173,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You answer occurs in a gentle nod and a soft moan letting him know that his orders has succeeded making you wet.'
-			'Pleased, he nods his head as he continues on, "Remove your clothing I want to see them wet panties."'
-			'Once again you comply and remove you clothing piece by piece as he carefully scans your body, "Good, now sit back down again and spread your legs, slide your panties down I want to see that vulva exposed..."'
+			'Your answer comes as a gentle nod and a soft moan letting him know that his orders has succeeded in making you wet.'
+			'Pleased, he nods his head as he continues on, "Remove your clothing, I want to see them wet panties."'
+			'Once again, you comply and remove you clothing piece by piece as he carefully scans your body, "Good, now sit back down again and spread your legs, slide your panties down, I want to see that vulva exposed..."'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -186,7 +186,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show4.jpg"></center>'
 				'"I hate you..." you whisper softly as you obey.'
 				'He starts chuckling, "Good, I want you to hate me, this is making you feel humiliated. Use that frustration to begin touching yourself and pick up the pace this time."'
-				'You look madly at him as you use your fingers to rub on your exposed clit, picking up the pace. Just as you''re feeling excited he tells you to slow down as he doesn''t want you to get too much pleasure out of this...'
+				'You look madly at him as you use your fingers to rub on your exposed clit, picking up the pace. Just as you''re feeling excited, he tells you to slow down as he doesn''t want you to get too much pleasure out of this...'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -195,9 +195,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show5.jpg"></center>'
-					'By the time you''ve gradually slowed down, the security guard himself has started jerking off as he''s closely observing your every move, turned on by your obedience.'
-					'Suddenly an urge overcomes you and without him commanding you, your other hand travels upward your body stopping at your breast and you carefully begin to play with one of your nipples, gently rubbing it in a circular motion building up your arousal.'
-					'You don''t even care anymore if he approves or not, you''re too excited and it''s getting the best of you as you begin picking up the pace again, moaning loudly by now.'
+					'By the time you''ve gradually slowed down, the security guard himself has started jerking off as he closely observes your every move, turned on by your obedience.'
+					'Suddenly, an urge overcomes you, and without him commanding you, your other hand travels upward, stopping at your breast. You carefully begin to play with one of your nipples, gently rubbing it in a circular motion building up your arousal.'
+					'You don''t even care anymore if he approves or not. You''re too excited, and it''s getting the best of you as you begin picking up the pace again, moaning loudly by now.'
 					'"You little minx! Who told you to take the control?" he manages to say between his panting, "I''ll let you off this time as I love seeing you squirm, as you appease me... but use this instead" as he hands over a fake cock.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -207,9 +207,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 						gs 'boyStat', 'D2'
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show6.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your eagerly grab the fake cock and rub it against your clit swiftly, your pussy lips have turned bright pink and you just want to explode. You look at him pleadingly to let you orgasm.'
-						'But to your dismay the security guard is only focused on himself as he''s furiously stroking his cock...'
-						'You pick up the pace not wanting to be outpaced by him and just as you''re about to orgasm, the security guard decides that it''s time for some payback, as he smugly commands you to stop touching yourself right away...'
+						'Your eagerly grab the fake cock and rub it against your clit swiftly. Your pussy lips have turned bright pink, and you just want to explode. You look at him pleadingly, begging him to let you orgasm.'
+						'But to your dismay, the security guard is only focused on himself as he''s furiously stroking his cock...'
+						'You pick up the pace, not wanting to be outpaced by him, but just as you''re about to orgasm, the security guard seems to decide that it''s time for some payback, as he smugly commands you to stop touching yourself right away...'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -219,11 +219,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 							$orgasm = 'yes'
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show7.jpg"></center>'
-							'All of your body is screaming in agony as you obey and stop, your pulsating pussy being deprived of an orgasm and your mind is about to snap...'
+							'All of your body is screaming in agony as you obey and stop, your pulsating pussy deprived of an orgasm and your mind about to snap...'
 							'The security guard continues stroking as you look at him pleadingly again, letting out a small whimper, "Please, let me continue, I was so close..."'
-							'The room turns almost silent as you can only hear the sound from his squishy strokes and after a few moments he barely manages to tell you to continue on and you eagerly sit on the fake cock and, spreading your swollen pussy, you don''t know if he''ll stop you anew.'
-							'It doesn''t take long before you hear loud panting and groaning as he finishes but you''ve managed to faze him out as you''re approaching an orgasm once again as you''re now furiously penetrating yourself. You want to make sure that you''re able to finish before he''s able to stop you.'
-							'His commanding tone and the build up has finally come into fruition as your legs stiffen, your pussy goes numb and you orgasm violently, trembling, barely being able to sit still on the chair. The orgasm is so immense that you feel your ears ringing afterwards for a few minutes.'
+							'The room turns almost silent as you can only hear the sound from his squishy strokes, and after a few moments, he barely manages to tell you to continue on. You eagerly sit on the fake cock, spreading your swollen pussy, as you don''t know if he''ll stop you anew.'
+							'It doesn''t take long before you hear loud panting and groaning as he finishes, but you''ve managed to faze him out as you''re approaching an orgasm once again, now furiously penetrating yourself. You want to make sure that you''re able to finish before he''s able to stop you.'
+							'His commanding tone and the build up has finally come to fruition as your legs stiffen, your pussy goes numb and you orgasm violently, trembling, barely able to sit still on the chair. The orgasm is so immense that you feel your ears ringing afterwards for a few minutes.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 3, 'sub', 'exhibition'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -233,9 +233,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show8.jpg"></center>'
 								'You keep the fake cock inside you for a while as you calm down. The security guard is looking pleased at you.'
-								'Ashamed, you quickly grab your clothes and start putting on your clothes. While you''re getting dressed you look at him with dismay and impatiently ask, "Are we done now?"'
-								'The security guard grins and tells you to wait for a moment while he goes away explaining that he needs to go to take care of a thing and that he would be right back...'
-								'You make yourself complainant as possible as you smile and nod just wanting this to be over with so you can continue on with your day.'
+								'Ashamed, you quickly grab your clothes and start putting them on. While you''re getting dressed, you look at him with disgust and impatiently ask, "Are we done now?"'
+								'The security guard grins and tells you to wait for a moment while he goes away, explaining that he needs to go to take care of a thing and that he will be right back...'
+								'You make yourself look as compliant as possible as you smile and nod, just wanting this to be over with so you can continue on with your day.'
 
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -248,20 +248,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'show':
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/show/show9.jpg"></center>'
 									'You patiently sit and wait for the security guard to return. You closely listen to every little sound happening outside the office hoping that he''ll return soon and let you go.'
-									'All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
+									'All of a sudden, you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
 
 									if policeCalled <= 4:
 										'To your dismay the security guard has not only called the manager but there''s even a police officer standing there with them.'
-										'The security guard smugly proclaims, "Here she is officer I had her locked up all the time..." He turns to the manager, "Don''t worry sir, I''ve already recovered the video evidence..."'
-										'The manager nods while the police officer takes approaches you resolutely, telling you to stand and turn around so he can handcuff you.'
-										'You obediently turn around and the police officer tightens his cuffs so they sit real tight. As he finishes he grabs you by the arm and leads you away...'
+										'The security guard smugly proclaims, "Here she is officer. I had her locked up the whole time..." He turns to the manager, "Don''t worry sir, I''ve already recovered the video evidence..."'
+										'The manager nods while the police officer approaches you resolutely, telling you to stand and turn around so he can handcuff you.'
+										'You obediently turn around, and the police officer tightens his cuffs so they sit real tight. As he finishes, he grabs you by the arm and leads you away...'
 
 										act 'Go to the police station':gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'shplft'
 
 									else
-										'The door opens and to your surprise there''s only the security guard standing there holding a video cassette in his hand, "Sorry for the wait, it took me a while to get hold of the cassette."'
+										'The door opens, and thankfully, there''s only the security guard standing there holding a video cassette in his hand. "Sorry for the wait, it took me a while to get hold of the cassette."'
 										'Your face brightens as you know that he went through all sorts of trouble to leave no trace behind that you''ve ever been here.'
-										'"Here take the tape and destroy it." he states, "Be gone now before anyone spots you and we both get in trouble."'
+										'"Here take the tape and destroy it," he states, "Be gone now before anyone spots you and we both get in trouble."'
 										'You nod and hurriedly jump away from the chair, grabbing the tape as you walk by the security guard...'
 
 										act 'Head outside':gt 'city_center'
@@ -283,26 +283,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj1.jpg"></center>'
 	'"How about I give you a blowjob and you let me go?" you calmly suggest.'
-	'The security guard is taken aback a little by your suggestion but it doesn''t take long before you notice a smirk on his face, "How about this, if you perform well enough I''ll let you go otherwise I''ll be calling the cops."'
-	'Not having lot of choice you look him in the eyes and nod.'
-	'"Good! But before we begin I want a memento to remember you by." he adds as he pulls out his cellphone.'
+	'The security guard is taken aback a little by your suggestion, but it doesn''t take long before you notice a smirk on his face. "How about this, if you perform well enough, I''ll let you go, otherwise I''ll be calling the cops."'
+	'Not having lot of choice, you look him in the eyes and nod.'
+	'"Good! But before we begin I want a memento to remember you by," he adds as he pulls out his cellphone.'
 
 	act 'Take picture':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You happily stand up and smile as you can hear his cellphone camera snaps.'
-		'"This will do. I can''t wait to show you off to my friends." he tells you.'
+		'You happily stand up and smile as you can hear his cellphone camera snap.'
+		'"This will do. I can''t wait to show you off to my friends," he tells you.'
 		'You can''t do anything more than smile and nod as you need to play along so he lets you go.'
-		'"That''s enough, girl! Time to get to it. Remove your clothes let me see your naked body!" he commands.'
+		'"That''s enough, girl! Time to get to it. Remove your clothes, let me see your naked body!" he commands.'
 
 		act 'Strip':
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You pleadingly look at him but he turns his head around to avoid meeting your eyes. Seeing he won''t budge you slowly start taking off your clothes.'
-			'The security guards gaze turns to you again and he''s carefully watching as you remove one cloth after another as you try to cover up your naked body.'
+			'You pleadingly look at him, but he turns his head around to avoid meeting your eyes. Seeing he won''t budge, you slowly start taking off your clothes.'
+			'The security guard''s gaze turns to you again, and he carefully watches as you remove one cloth after another as you try to cover up your naked body.'
 			'"Good job, girl! Look at your fine breasts. Don''t be shy and cover yourself, the plan is to arouse me..." he smirks, "Now get on your knees."'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub'
@@ -312,8 +312,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj4.jpg"></center>'
-				'You get down on your knees and await while he''s rubbing his cock through his pants.'
-				'After a short wait he unzips the pants and releases his cock. As it pops out you let out a gasp, surprised by the massive size, "You''re way bigger than I expected." you say as you observe his stiff cock.'
+				'You get down on your knees and wait while he rubs his cock through his pants.'
+				'After a short while, he unzips the pants and releases his cock. As it pops out, you let out a gasp, surprised by the massive size. "You''re way bigger than I expected," you say as you observe his stiff cock.'
 				'He lets out a laugh and jokes, "Are you sure that it will be able to fit in your mouth?"'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub'
@@ -323,9 +323,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj5.jpg"></center>'
-					'Triggered by his joke and wanting to show him up you slowly move your lips near his cock and give his glans a little kiss. You can hear him let out a soft groan, he must be really sensitive.'
-					'Feeling encouraged you start moving your lips around his glans, letting out your tongue to tease his penis head.'
-					'The security guard isn''t saying anything and seems to be pleased by your performance...'
+					'Triggered by his joke and wanting to show him up, you slowly move your lips near his cock and give his glans a little kiss. You can hear him let out a soft groan. He must be really sensitive.'
+					'Feeling encouraged, you start moving your lips around his glans, letting out your tongue to tease his penis head.'
+					'The security guard doesn''t say anything and seems to be pleased by your performance...'
 					'You look up at him and give him a little smile, biting your lip before moving your tongue up and down his shaft...'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
@@ -335,10 +335,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 						*clr & cla
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj6.jpg"></center>'
-						'Not wanting to tease him anymore you wrap your lips around his glans and slowly let the head glide deeper inside your mouth. You didn''t expect him to taste this good...'
+						'Not wanting to tease him anymore, you wrap your lips around his glans and slowly let the head glide deeper inside your mouth. You didn''t expect him to taste this good...'
 						'The security guard didn''t expect you to be this bold as you feel his whole body stiffen...'
-						'After a few moments you pick up the pace and before you know it, you''ve swallowed half his cock. You''re totally engulfed and even manage to forget why you''re sucking him off.'
-						'It doesn''t take long before his cock is twitching and he tells you pull out before he cums...'
+						'After a few moments, you pick up the pace, and before you know it, you''ve swallowed half his cock. You''re totally engulfed and even manage to forget why you''re sucking him off.'
+						'It doesn''t take long before his cock is twitching and he tells you to pull out before he cums...'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -348,9 +348,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj7.jpg"></center>'
 							'Disappointed, you pull out and let out a loud mouth sound as you remove your lips from his cock.'
-							'By now the security guard is panting heavily and you give him a minute to recover before you start tugging his cock.'
-							'You grab his cock quite hard and you start quickly stroking him up and down. You''re enjoying yourself as you''re in command and he''s at your mercy.'
-							'You notice a little pre-cum come and you feel this urge to slow down and tease him as you want to drag this out for as long as possible...'
+							'By now, the security guard is panting heavily, and you give him a minute to recover before you start tugging his cock.'
+							'You grab his cock quite hard, and you start quickly stroking him up and down. You''re enjoying yourself as you''re in command and he''s at your mercy.'
+							'You notice a little pre-cum come out, and you feel this urge to slow down and tease him as you want to drag this out for as long as possible...'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'hj', 5, 'dom'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -361,10 +361,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 								spafinloc = 15
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj8.jpg"></center>'
-								'"Don''t you dare slowing down!" he manages to yell out just as you slowed down the pace...'
-								'Surprised by his reaction, you quickly pick up the pace and as your hand moves up and down his cock it stops twitching and gets really stiff and after two more tugs he shoots all over your chest area...'
-								'As you look down you notice you''re covered in his thick cum... You give his cock a few more tugs to get it all out and then let go of it as it continues to twitch after being let go.'
-								'"Get cleaned up and I''ll be back soon!" he tells you as he zips his pants and leaves the office...'
+								'"Don''t you dare slowing down!" he manages to yell out just as you start to...'
+								'Surprised by his reaction, you quickly pick up the pace, and as your hand moves up and down his cock, it stops twitching and gets really stiff. After two more tugs, he shoots all over your chest area...'
+								'As you look down, you notice you''re covered in his thick cum... You give his cock a few more tugs to get it all out and then let go of it as it continues to twitch.'
+								'"Get cleaned up, and I''ll be back soon!" he tells you as he zips his pants and leaves the office...'
 
 								gs 'arousal', 'hj', 2, 'dom'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -380,14 +380,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/bj/bj9.jpg"></center>'
 									'You clean yourself up and get dressed as soon you hear the door close. There''s nothing more to do than patiently sit and wait for the security guard to return.'
-									'You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office hoping that he''ll return soon and let you go. All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
+									'You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office, hoping that he''ll return soon and let you go. All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
 
 									if policeCalled <= 3:
 										toldonguard = 2
-										'To your dismay the security guard has not only called the manager but there''s even a police officer standing there with them.'
-										'The security guard smugly proclaims, "Here she is officer I had her locked up all the time..." He turns to the manager, "Don''t worry sir, I''ve already recovered the video evidence..."'
-										'The manager nods while the police officer takes approaches you resolutely, telling you to stand and turn around so he can handcuff you.'
-										'You obediently turn around and the police officer tightens his cuffs so they sit real tight. As he finishes he grabs you by the arm and leads you away...'
+										'To your dismay, the security guard has not only called the manager but there''s even a police officer standing there with them.'
+										'The security guard smugly proclaims, "Here she is officer I had her locked up the whole time..." He turns to the manager, "Don''t worry sir, I''ve already recovered the video evidence..."'
+										'The manager nods while the police officer approaches you resolutely, telling you to stand and turn around so he can handcuff you.'
+										'You obediently turn around, and the police officer tightens his cuffs so they sit real tight. As he finishes, he grabs you by the arm and leads you away...'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -395,9 +395,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj':
 										act 'Go to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'shplft'
 
 									else
-										'The door opens and to your surprise there''s the only the security guard standing there holding a video cassette in his hand, "Sorry for the wait, it took me a while to get hold of the cassette."'
+										'The door opens, and thankfully, there''s only the security guard standing there holding a video cassette in his hand. "Sorry for the wait, it took me a while to get hold of the cassette."'
 										'Your face brightens as you know that he went through all sorts of trouble to leave no trace behind that you''ve ever been here.'
-										'"Here take the tape and destroy it." he states, "Be gone now before anyone spots you and we both get in trouble."'
+										'"Here take the tape and destroy it," he states, "Be gone now before anyone spots you and we both get in trouble."'
 										'You nod and hurriedly jump away from the chair, grabbing the tape as you walk by the security guard...'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -423,18 +423,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bribe':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/offermoney.jpg"></center>'
 	'You look the security guard straight in the eyes, "I can offer you money if you let me go."'
 	'The security guard begins to chuckle, "You? Offer me money? Don''t be silly girl, you can''t possibly bribe me... Where would you have the money for that..."'
-	'You pout a little as you listen to him, "Just tell me how much you want and I''ll pay you off..." as you finish you give him a little wink.'
-	'"If you can afford the stuff why did you steal?" he remarks.'
+	'You pout a little as you listen to him, "Just tell me how much you want, and I''ll pay you off..." As you finish, you give him a little wink.'
+	'"If you can afford the stuff, why did you steal?" he remarks.'
 
 	act 'Explain':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/offermoney.jpg"></center>'
-		'"You want my honest answer?" you look at him in all seriousness, "Simply put, because I can and the adrenaline kick is amazing!"'
+		'"You want my honest answer?" you look at him, a serious expression on your face, "Simply put, because I can and the adrenaline kick is amazing!"'
 		'The security guard smirks, "So you''re only doing it for the fun of it?"'
-		'Looking pleased, you give him a satisfying nod.'
-		'All of a sudden he changes his posture, "I don''t usually do this but if you give me 5000<b>₽</b> then we''re all good."'
+		'Looking pleased, you give him a satisfied nod.'
+		'All of a sudden, he changes his posture, "I don''t usually do this, but if you give me 5000 <b>₽</b>, then we''re all good."'
 		'"And if I don''t?" you curiously inquire.'
 		'"You''ll have to face the consequences then..." he shortly replies.'
 
@@ -445,10 +445,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bribe':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/offermoney.jpg"></center>'
 			'You burst out in laughter, "Fine, fine. I''ll pay up don''t worry... Relax, I was only joking around with you."'
-			'"Sure, sure... Hurry up now, show me the money, before anyone shows up..." he hurries you on.'
+			'"Sure, sure... Hurry up now, show me the money before anyone shows up..." he hurries you on.'
 			'You keep on laughing as you hand over the money to him.'
-			'He quickly counts the money and then has you stand up and hurries you outside the office, pushing you on. He explains to which way to take and not to talk to anyone.'
-			'You give him a smile and thank him for being so nice to you... You turn around a last time to tease him before turning the corner.'
+			'He quickly counts the money and then has you stand up and hurries you outside the office, pushing you on. He tells you which way to take and not to talk to anyone.'
+			'You give him a smile and thank him for being so nice to you... You turn around one last time to tease him before turning the corner.'
 
 			act 'Walk out':gt 'city_center'
 		end
@@ -461,11 +461,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bribe':
 			'You shake your head, "I''m not interested in paying you off. Do your worst..." you challenge him.'
 			'His face turns red with anger as he turns away from you and walks out of the office...'
 			*nl
-			'Some minutes pass while you patiently wait for him to return. You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office. All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
-			'"There she is officer. This girl was stealing from the supermarket. We''ve got evidence and everything." he states clearly irritated by your arrogance.'
+			'Some minutes pass while you patiently wait for him to return. You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office. All of a sudden, you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
+			'To your dismay, you see the security guard has returned with a police officer in tow. "There she is officer. This girl was stealing from the supermarket. We''ve got evidence and everything," the guard states, clearly irritated by your arrogance.'
 			'The officer sighs and determinedly walks over to you, "Turn around girl, I need to cuff you..."'
-			'Without uttering a word you turn around and let the officer cuff you. The cuffs are sitting tight but you refuse to give the smallest satisfaction that you''re hurting to the security guard.'
-			'The police officer chats with the security guard before leading you away to the Police station...'
+			'Without uttering a word, you turn around and let the officer cuff you. The cuffs are sitting tight, but you refuse to give the security guard the smallest satisfaction by letting him know that.'
+			'The police officer chats with the security guard before leading you away to the police station...'
 
 			act 'Go to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'shplft'
 		end
@@ -477,21 +477,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'quiet':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/quiet.jpg"></center>'
-	'All of a sudden you hesitate, why should you offer him anything. You might as keep quiet as the end result will still be the same.'
+	'All of a sudden you hesitate. Why should you offer him anything? You might as well keep quiet as the end result will still be the same.'
 	'"Well girl, don''t test my patience, I don''t have all the day. Tell me now what do you have to offer."'
-	'You give him a look full of disgust. You''re going to see this throughout no matter the consequences.'
-	'"Well? Why did you go all quiet all of a sudden?" he demands an answer. Noticing that you won''t reply his face turns red and slams the door behind him...'
+	'You give him a look full of disgust. You''re going to see this through, no matter the consequences.'
+	'"Well? Why did you go all quiet all of a sudden?" he demands. Noticing that you won''t reply, his face turns red and he stomps out of the room, slamming the door behind him...'
 
 	act 'Wait':
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/police/arrested.jpg"></center>'
-		'Some minutes pass while you patiently wait for him to return. You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office. All of a sudden you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
-		'"There she is officer. This girl was stealing from the supermarket. We''ve got evidence and everything." he states clearly irritated by your arrogance.'
+		'Some minutes pass while you patiently wait for him to return. You closely pay attention to every little sound happening outside the office. All of a sudden, you hear footsteps and someone opening the door...'
+		'To your dismay, you see the security guard has returned with a police officer in tow. "There she is officer. This girl was stealing from the supermarket. We''ve got evidence and everything," the guard states, clearly irritated by your arrogance.'
 		'The officer sighs and determinedly walks over to you, "Turn around girl, I need to cuff you..."'
-		'Without uttering a word you turn around and let the officer cuff you. The cuffs are sitting tight but you refuse to give the smallest satisfaction that you''re hurting to the security guard.'
-		'The police officer chats with the security guard before leading you away to the Police station...'
+		'Without uttering a word, you turn around and let the officer cuff you. The cuffs are sitting tight, but you refuse to give the security guard the smallest satisfaction by letting him know that.'
+		'The police officer chats with the security guard before leading you away to the police station...'
 
 		act 'Go to the police station': gt 'police_station', 'entrance', 'shplft'
 	end
@@ -504,7 +504,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge1.jpg"></center>'
-	'The guard forcefully drags you into the room and shoves you towards the chair, saying "Well well, look who''s back... if it isn''t the little rat!" he heatedly comments.'
+	'The guard forcefully drags you into the room and shoves you towards the chair. "Well well, look who''s back... if it isn''t the little rat!" he heatedly comments.'
 	'<i>Fuck it''s the same guard, now you''ve done it, <<$pcs_nickname>>, get prepared for whatever awaits you... your fate is in his hands...</i>'
 	'"I hate you fucking rats. Do you know what I had to go through to get away from ending up in jail. Luckily one of the pigs didn''t mind getting bribed so I got away," he grins, "And now for your punishment."'
 
@@ -513,10 +513,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You squirm and look apologetically at him, "Please... You have to believe me I didn''t have any option. They made me confess that you forced yourself onto me..." you try to deceit him.'
+		'You squirm and look apologetically at him. "Please... You have to believe me, I didn''t have any option. They made me confess that you forced yourself onto me..." you try to deceive him.'
 		'Fuming, he lunges towards you, "Listen here, you little slut. I don''t give a shit if they forced you into anything. You ratted and you need to be taught a lesson."'
 		'You put together your hands pleading for mercy as a last ditch effort to make him rethink it all.'
-		'But to your dismay he doesn''t budge, "Like pleading will help you now, slut!" and before you know it he''s standing next you.'
+		'But to your dismay, he doesn''t budge, and before you know it, he''s standing next you. "Like pleading will help you now, slut!"'
 
 		act 'Squeak':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -524,9 +524,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge3.jpg"></center>'
 			'Before you''re able to react to what he''s saying, you feel a cold hand sliding down your body towards your breasts.'
-			'Reacting instinctively you look up only to see the security guards eyes filled with rage and arousal. His hand keeps sliding down and it doesn''t take long before he is fondling one of your breasts.'
-			'You let out a soft moan as he softly touches your nipple, making you shiver with excitement, "You''re enjoying yourself, aren''t you slut?" he inquires as you let out a moan as an answer to his inquiry.'
-			'All of sudden you can feel the mood change as he violently grabs hold of your breast and starts roughly kneading it, "It''s not one of those times where you''re supposed to feel excited, slut." The pain you feel in one of your breast is almost unbearable.'
+			'Reacting instinctively, you look up only to see the security guard''s eyes filled with rage and arousal. His hand keeps sliding down, and it doesn''t take long before he is fondling one of your breasts.'
+			'You let out a soft moan as he softly touches your nipple, making you shiver with excitement. "You''re enjoying yourself, aren''t you slut?" he inquires as you let out another moan as an answer.'
+			'All of a sudden, you can feel the mood change as he violently grabs hold of your breast and starts roughly kneading it. "It''s not one of those times where you''re supposed to feel excited, slut." The pain you feel in your breast is almost unbearable.'
 
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5, 'sub', 'humiliation'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -538,11 +538,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge4.jpg"></center>'
-				'In sheer desperation you begin to look for a way to stop. You try looking at him pleadingly but to no avail. Next you try to speak up but he kneads it even harder, "Want this to stop?" he asks.'
-				'Urgently wanting him to stop you uncontrollably nod, "On your knees then whore. I want you to go deep and don''t you dare letting me feeling those teeth either," as he lets go of your sore breast.'
+				'In sheer desperation, you begin to look for a way to convince him to stop. You try looking at him pleadingly but to no avail. Next you try to speak up, but he kneads your breast even harder. "Want this to stop?" he asks.'
+				'Urgently wanting that, you uncontrollably nod. "On your knees then whore. I want you to go deep and don''t you dare let me feel those teeth either," he says as he lets go of your sore breast.'
 				'You quickly get down on your knees and unbutton his pants, exposing his bare cock. You grab hold of his shaft and gently lick on his glans to get him ready. You open your mouth and wrap your lips around his cock and slowly begin working your way up and down.'
-				'While you''re doing this you hear an annoyed sigh and you feel a hand on your back-head locking you in. Without any hesitation the security guard begins thrusting going deeper for every thrust, "Remember what I said, I don''t want to feel any teeth!"'
-				'Fearing what he might do you try your best to accommodate him. His thrusts become more rapid and he goes really deep down your throat and there are several times you feel that you''re close to throwing up, "Lube it up whore if you don''t want to feel any pain..." you hear him say as you gag once more on his cock.'
+				'While you''re doing this, you hear an annoyed sigh, and you feel a hand on the back of your head locking you in. Without any hesitation, the security guard begins thrusting, going deeper with every thrust. "Remember what I said, I don''t want to feel any teeth!"'
+				'Fearing what he might do, you try your best to accommodate him. His thrusts become more rapid, and he goes really deep down your throat. There are several times you feel that you''re close to throwing up. "Lube it up whore if you don''t want to feel any pain..." you hear him say as you gag once more on his cock.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'deepthroat'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -552,10 +552,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 					gs 'pain', 7, 'vaginal', 'tear'
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge5.jpg"></center>'
-					'"That''s enough of that!" he yells out as he pulls quickly out of your mouth, making your mouth doing a wet plop sound. He grabs you harshly by the shoulders and leads you over to the desk where he bends you over it, giving him a full look of your orifices.'
-					'"Which one should we take," he teases as you await him to decide, hoping whichever he picks he''ll be gentle. "This one will suffice today!" he declares as he furiously pushes inside your pussy without any care in the world. As he penetrates, you let out a loud scream by the sheer pain you''re experiencing.'
-					'"Scream as much as you want!" he yells out between his thrusts, "It only turns me on even more!" he continues frantically pounding you. He''s going deep and you can feel his cock hitting your cervix.'
-					'After a few minutes you expect him to slow down but he''s persisting and grabs you by the hair and continues on pounding you, leaving you in despair between pain and pleasure.'
+					'"That''s enough of that!" he yells out as he pulls quickly out of your mouth with a wet plop. He grabs you harshly by the shoulders and leads you over to the desk, which he bends you over, giving him a full look at your orifices.'
+					'"Which one should we take," he teases as you await him to decide, hoping whichever he picks he''ll be gentle. "This one will suffice today!" he declares as he furiously pushes inside your pussy without any care in the world. As he penetrates, you let out a loud scream from the sheer pain you''re experiencing.'
+					'"Scream as much as you want!" he yells out between his thrusts, "It only turns me on even more!" he continues frantically pounding you. He''s going deep, and you can feel his cock hitting your cervix.'
+					'After a few minutes, you expect him to slow down, but he persists, grabbing you by the hair and continuing on pounding you, leaving you in despair between pain and pleasure.'
 
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -566,10 +566,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 						spafinloc = 15
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge6.jpg"></center>'
-						'You can feel your excitement being built up as you near an orgasm and prepare for it. The security guard is still pounding you away but you''ve adjusted really well and by now you''re feeling more pleasure than pain.'
-						'You''re loudly moaning but so is he, your pussy walls are tightening and squishing his cock and just as you''re about orgasm he pulls out leaving your hole empty, craving for his cock to enter you again, "Did you really expect that I would let you orgasm?" he smirks, "Didn''t I tell you no pleasure for you today!"'
-						'You look meekly at him as he pushes you down on your knees and begins jerking off himself. You''re still feeling cheated on your orgasm and pout as he begins to groan and it doesn''t take long before your breasts are covered by his warm cum.'
-						'He gives his cock a few more jerks, making sure he''s drained his cock and he keenly looks at your chest, admiring his work. As everything settles down you almost tear up, reminded by the pain you feel in your vagina and breast.'
+						'You can feel your excitement being built up as you near an orgasm and prepare for it. The security guard is still pounding you away, but you''ve adjusted really well, and by now, you''re feeling more pleasure than pain.'
+						'You''re loudly moaning but so is he as your pussy walls tighten and squish his cock. Just as you''re about to orgasm, he pulls out, leaving your hole empty, craving for his cock to enter you again. "Did you really expect that I would let you orgasm?" he smirks, "Didn''t I tell you no pleasure for you today!"'
+						'You look meekly at him as he pushes you down on your knees and begins jerking off himself. You''re still feeling cheated on your orgasm and pout as he begins to groan, and it doesn''t take long before your breasts are covered by his warm cum.'
+						'He gives his cock a few more jerks, making sure he''s drained it, and he keenly looks at your chest, admiring his work. As everything settles down, you almost tear up, reminded by the pain you feel in your vagina and breast.'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -582,12 +582,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/shared/shoplift/sex/revenge/revenge7.jpg"></center>'
 							!Clean yourself up as he watches, can''t believe what you''ve just done, he calls the cops and threatens Sveta not to say anything cause next time he won''t be this gentle
-							'"Here, get cleaned up and dress yourself!" he hands you over a towel. The security guard remains observing you while you clean yourself up, making sure you''ve cleaned yourself properly not leaving a trace behind.'
-							'While you''re putting on your clothes you can''t let go of feeling ashamed to what you''ve experienced and try your best to avoid eye contact.'
-							'"Sit down on that chair and wait for me to return whore!" he commands as you barely manage to even give him a subtle nod. As you sit down he walks up to you, "Listen here. Don''t you dare telling anyone about this... I know who you are and where you live and the next time I won''t be as gentle as this time." With that he turns and walks out of the office, locking it, leaving you to ponder on what''s about to happen next.'
+							'"Here, get cleaned up and dress yourself!" he hands you over a towel. The security guard remains observing you while you clean yourself up, making sure you do it properly not leaving a trace behind.'
+							'While you''re putting on your clothes, you can''t let go of the feeling of shame from what you''ve experienced and try your best to avoid eye contact.'
+							'"Sit down on that chair and wait for me to return whore!" he commands as you barely manage to even give him a subtle nod. As you sit down, he walks up to you, "Listen here. Don''t you dare go telling anyone about this... I know who you are and where you live and the next time I won''t be as gentle as this time." With that, he turns and walks out of the office, locking it, leaving you to ponder on what''s about to happen next.'
 							*nl
-							'Some minutes pass by and you hear several voices approaching the door. As they open up you see the security guard standing there with a police officer, "This one?" he asks as he points at you. The security guard nods his head, "Yeah she''s a real pain in the ass."'
-							'The officer walks over to you and cuffs you and begins leading you away. As you''re being led by the security guard he shines up in a smile, mocking you.'
+							'Some minutes pass by, and you hear several voices approaching the door. As it opens up, you see the security guard standing there with a police officer. "This one?" the officer asks as he points at you. The security guard nods his head, "Yeah she''s a real pain in the ass."'
+							'The officer walks over to you, cuffs you and begins leading you away. As you''re being led by the security guard, he flashes you a smile, mocking you.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'

locations/shulgabath.qsrc

@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Bathroom</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/vanna.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Uncle Sergey''s bathroom is small and very unpretentious. Nevertheless, it has everything a bathroom needs. There is a <a href="exec: gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a> above the sink, where you can ' + iif(pcs_hairbsh = 0,'<a href="exec: gt ''mirror'',''brush''">brush</a>','brush') + ' your hair, a shower and bath tub.'
+	'Uncle Sergey''s bathroom is small and very unpretentious. Nevertheless, it has everything a bathroom needs. There is a <a href="exec: gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a> above the sink, where you can ' + iif(pcs_hairbsh = 0,'<a href="exec: gt ''mirror'',''brush''">brush</a>','brush') + ' your hair, a shower and a bathtub.'
 	*nl
 
 	act 'Return to the hallway': gt'shulgahall'
@@ -57,7 +57,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sexev1':
 	sh_sonya_sexev += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/bj'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'When you enter the bathroom, you freeze when you hear a girl''s voice in there. You carefully open the door to see Sonia sucking Sergey''s cock. She''s even taking a video of herself doing it... you wonder why?'
+	'When you reach the bathroom, you freeze when you hear a girl''s voice in there. You carefully open the door to see Sonia sucking Sergey''s cock. She''s even taking a video of herself doing it... you wonder why?'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -73,26 +73,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sexev2':
 	sh_sonya_sexev += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/ev2_1'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'When you want to enter the bathroom, you see Sonia standing in front of the mirror. Luckily she didn''t see you; she was too occupied counting money. Your curiosity gets the better of you, and you decide to watch her for a while. Where did she get that money?'
+	'When you start to enter the bathroom, you see Sonia standing in front of the mirror. Luckily, she doesn''t seem to see you; she is too occupied counting money. Your curiosity gets the better of you, and you decide to watch her for a while. Where did she get that money?'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/ev2_2'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'Sonia starts to undress, and then puts on a delicate lingerie set. She then touches up on her make-up, fixing every little blemish she can find.'
-		'You realize she''s probably going to come out of the bathroom soon, and quickly move to the kitchen and hide there.'
-		'Sure enough, Sonia comes out of the bathroom a few seconds later, and heads straight for uncle Sergey''s bedroom.'
+		'Sonia starts to undress and then puts on a delicate lingerie set. She then touches up on her make-up, fixing every little blemish she can find.'
+		'You realize she''s probably going to come out of the bathroom soon and quickly move to the kitchen and hide there.'
+		'Sure enough, Sonia comes out of the bathroom a few seconds later and heads straight for uncle Sergey''s bedroom.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev2_3'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You quickly sneak to the door, and carefully open it just enough so you can see what''s happening inside the room.'
+			'You quickly sneak to the door and carefully open it just enough so you can see what''s happening inside the room.'
 			'What you see does not surprise you in the slightest; Sonia is on her knees in front of Sergey, eagerly sucking on his dick.'
 			'"Very nice, baby. Take it deeper... all the way in, there you go..." he encourages her.'
-			'After sucking his dick for a few minutes, Sonia pulls away from Sergey. Just when he''s about to ask if something''s wrong, she grins lewdly at him and whispers: "Sergey Borisovich, I want you to fuck me like I''m the last whore on the planet! I''m all yours, baby."'
+			'After sucking his dick for a few minutes, Sonia pulls away from Sergey. Just when he''s about to ask if something''s wrong, she grins lewdly at him and whispers, "Sergey Shulgin, I want you to fuck me like I''m the last whore on the planet! I''m all yours, baby."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'gopsex', 'masturb_gg'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -100,8 +100,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sexev2':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev2_4'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'Sergey makes Sonia bend over for him and rams his cock inside her sopping cunt. When he rhythmically fucks your classmate, Sonia moans and groans while her face turns a deep red. She''s completely lost in the moment... for a second you wonder why Sergey even gave her money, looking at her like this makes you think she probably would''ve done it for free anyway.'
-				'After a few minutes Sonia orgasms violently on Sergey''s cock, and even squirts a little.'
+				'Sergey makes Sonia bend over for him and rams his cock inside her sopping cunt. When he rhythmically fucks your classmate, Sonia moans and groans while her face turns a deep red. She''s completely lost in the moment... for a second you wonder why Sergey even gave her money. Looking at her like this makes you think she probably would''ve done it for free anyway.'
+				'After a few minutes, Sonia orgasms violently on Sergey''s cock and even squirts a little.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				gs 'gopsex', 'masturb_gg'
@@ -109,8 +109,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sexev2':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev2_5'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 					*nl
-					'When he''s too worked up to postpone his orgasm any longer, Sergey says: "On your knees! Fast!"'
-					'Sonia aims to please, and immediately drops to her knees in front of him with her mouth wide open. Sergey finishes inside Sonia''s mouth, and she swallows his load eagerly. She loudly smacks her lips and smiles at him: "Mmm... delicious!"'
+					'When he''s too worked up to postpone his orgasm any longer, Sergey says, "On your knees! Fast!"'
+					'Sonia aims to please and immediately drops to her knees in front of him with her mouth wide open. Sergey finishes inside Sonia''s mouth, and she swallows his load eagerly. She loudly smacks her lips and smiles at him. "Mmm... delicious!"'
 					gs 'gopsex', 'masturb_gg'
 					'Now that they''re done, you realize you should probably get the hell out of there before they find you staring. You quickly shut the door.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
@@ -189,13 +189,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bazar':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/b.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'Ever since Sonia inadvertedly got way too drunk and gave five guys including Vitek and his friends a simultaneous blowjob near the disco, her reputation in Pavlovsk has been in shambles. The girls in her class all give her the silent treatment, pretending she does not exist. Meanwhile the guys all treat her like a cheap whore and regularly ask (or sometimes even demand) sex from her, knowing she doesn''t have the strength to say no.'
+	'Ever since Sonia inadvertently got way too drunk and gave five guys including Vitek and his friends a simultaneous blowjob near the disco, her reputation in Pavlovsk has been in shambles. The girls in her class all give her the silent treatment, pretending she does not exist. Meanwhile, the guys all treat her like a cheap whore and regularly ask (or sometimes even demand) sex from her, knowing she doesn''t have the strength to say no.'
 
 	sonya_textb_vanna = rand(1,7)
 	if sonya_textb_vanna = 1:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'You spend some time chatting about everyday things with Sonia.'
-	if sonya_textb_vanna = 2 and SchoolAtestat = 0:$sonya_textb_vanna	= 'When you ask Sonia how she''s doing in school, she laughs and says: "It''s very easy to get good grades at our school. All you have to do is get the teachers to like you. And as you may know, they all like me..."'
-	if sonya_textb_vanna = 2 and SchoolAtestat = 1:$sonya_textb_vanna	= 'When you ask Sonia about the kind of work she does since school ended, she shrugs: "It''s tough to get a decent job nowadays. I''m lucky I have some nice guys like Sergey helping me out with my bills, otherwise I wouldn''t know how to make ends meet!"'
-	if sonya_textb_vanna = 3:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'When you ask Sonia how often she comes to meet Sergey, you get a surprisingly honest answer: "It depends. Usually a few times a week, depending how much money he has. If he can afford it I come by more often, if money is tight I don''t visit as much. You don''t look like a fool, you know why I''m here. Still, I have so say... being fucked by Sergey is amazing! He''s more mature than most guys I sleep with, and such a skilled lover..."'
+	if sonya_textb_vanna = 2 and SchoolAtestat = 0:$sonya_textb_vanna	= 'When you ask Sonia how she''s doing in school, she laughs and says, "It''s very easy to get good grades at our school. All you have to do is get the teachers to like you. And as you may know, they all like me..."'
+	if sonya_textb_vanna = 2 and SchoolAtestat = 1:$sonya_textb_vanna	= 'When you ask Sonia about the kind of work she has been doing since school ended, she shrugs. "It''s tough to get a decent job nowadays. I''m lucky I have some nice guys like Sergey helping me out with my bills, otherwise I wouldn''t know how to make ends meet!"'
+	if sonya_textb_vanna = 3:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'When you ask Sonia how often she comes to meet Sergey, you get a surprisingly honest answer: "It depends. Usually a few times a week, depending how much money he has. If he can afford it, I come by more often, if money is tight I don''t visit as much. You don''t look like a fool, you know why I''m here. Still, I have to say... being fucked by Sergey is amazing! He''s more mature than most guys I sleep with, and such a skilled lover..."'
 	if sonya_textb_vanna = 4:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'Sonia tells you about some interesting encounters she had in the Pavlovsk hotel the other day.'
 	if sonya_textb_vanna = 5:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'Sonia tells an interesting story.'
 	if sonya_textb_vanna = 6:$sonya_textb_vanna = 'You spend some time chatting with Sonia, mostly sharing what the two of you have done today.'
@@ -204,7 +204,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bazar':
 	'<br><<$sonya_textb_vanna>><br>'
 
 	if sonya_bazar_count = 0:
-		'Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have time to go. Maybe I''ll see you here again, so we can chat some more!'
+		'Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, I have time to go. Maybe I''ll see you here again so we can chat some more!'
 	else
 		act 'Chat some more': gt 'shulgabath', 'bazar'
 	end
@@ -244,9 +244,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lesb':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/ev1_1.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'You fill the bath tub and get in. Sonia is still standing near the mirror, fixing her make-up. She doesn''t seem to mind that you are in here with her.'
-	'Then you smile at her and ask: "Hey Sonia... would you like to take a bath with me?"'
-	'Sonia looks puzzled for a second, and asks: "Like... you want me to get in the bath with you right now?"'
-	'When you nod, she grins: "Actually, that sounds like fun! Sure!" and quickly gets naked, sliding her naked body into the warm tub water.'
+	'Then you smile at her and ask, "Hey Sonia... would you like to take a bath with me?"'
+	'Sonia looks puzzled for a second, and asks, "Like... you want me to get in the bath with you right now?"'
+	'When you nod, she grins, "Actually, that sounds like fun! Sure!" and quickly gets naked, sliding her body into the warm tub water.'
 	if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the bath.'
 
 	act 'Continue':
@@ -254,13 +254,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lesb':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev1_2'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'"Mmmm..." Sonia muses, enjoying the warmth of the bath water slowly seeping into her body. For the next few minutes you just sit in the bath next to each other. Sonia occasionally looks at you, but doesn''t say much.'
+		'"Mmmm..." Sonia muses, enjoying the warmth of the bath water slowly seeping into her body. For the next few minutes, you just sit in the bath next to each other. Sonia occasionally looks at you but doesn''t say much.'
 
 		act 'Continue':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/sex/shuglinhome/vanna/ev1_3'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'Just when you were about to say something, Sonia moves closer to you and kisses you full on your mouth. You freeze for a second, and then think to yourself... why the hell not?'
+			'Just when you were about to say something, Sonia moves closer to you and kisses you full on your mouth. You freeze for a second and then think to yourself... why the hell not?'
 			'You kiss Sonia back eagerly, playing with her tongue as she thrusts it into your mouth.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 10, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -274,9 +274,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lesb':
 				$orgasm_txt = 'Sonia''s constant teasing pushes you over the edge, and you orgasm loudly when she licks your clit again.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 5, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', -5, 'lesbian'
-				'Sonia grins at you and asks playfully: "Did you like my tongue on your pussy, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+				'Sonia grins at you and asks playfully, "Did you like my tongue on your pussy, <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 				'"Absolutely!" you nod. "Come on, let me do the same for you! I want to taste you too!"'
-				'"I can''t right now, my mother is waiting for me at home", Sonia says wistfully. "Maybe next time?"'
+				'"I can''t right now, my mother is waiting for me at home," Sonia says wistfully. "Maybe next time?"'
 				'Sonia kisses you again, and you taste yourself on her lips. Mmmm... next time you really want to get a taste of her too!'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -298,11 +298,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'serg_sex':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/vanna/gr/ev1_1_'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'"Sure, I bet Sergey would love having an extra girl around when he fucks me!" she grins. "Come on!"'
-	'You follow her into his room, and she was right; Sergey loves the idea! Sonia eagerly begins to suck his cock, and then offers it to you after a while: "Come on, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Get to work!"'
-	'Sonia notices your hesitance and puts her hand behind your head, gently but firmly guiding your head to his cock. "Go on, you''ll love it! I''ll help!"'
-	'You lick the shaft first, and then take the head of his cock in your mouth. Sonia gently strokes your hair, whispering encouraging words into your ear while you try to take more and more of his length inside your mouth. From time to time she assists you quite actively, sucking the head of his cock while you lick his balls, or licking one side of the shaft while you lick the other. At one point, you''re even trying to kiss one another with Sergey''s cock between your mouths!'
+	'You follow her into his room, and she was right; Sergey loves the idea! Sonia eagerly begins to suck his cock and then offers it to you after a while. "Come on, <<$pcs_nickname>>! Get to work!"'
+	'Sonia notices your hesitance and puts her hand behind your head, gently but firmly guiding it to his cock. "Go on, you''ll love it! I''ll help!"'
+	'You lick the shaft first and then take the head of his cock in your mouth. Sonia gently strokes your hair, whispering encouraging words into your ear while you try to take more and more of his length inside your mouth. From time to time, she assists you quite actively, sucking the head of his cock while you lick his balls or licking one side of the shaft while you lick the other. At one point, you''re even trying to kiss one another with Sergey''s cock between your mouths!'
 	'You manage to take most of him in, but you have to yield and pull away before your gag reflex takes over. Sonia and Sergey both smile at you proudly, that was great!'
-	'"Wow, <<$pcs_nickname>>", Sonia says with some admiration in her voice, "I thought I was good with my mouth, but you sure look like you could teach me a thing or two!"'
+	'"Wow, <<$pcs_nickname>>," Sonia says with some admiration in her voice, "I thought I was good with my mouth, but you sure look like you could teach me a thing or two!"'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat', 'group'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':
@@ -312,8 +312,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'serg_sex':
 		'Sergey seems to have made his choice; he wants to fuck you first. He moves up behind you and rubs his hard cock against your pussy lips; the wetness of them combined with his precum make it feel very nice.'
 		'Sonia just watches as Sergey slowly pushes his dick further and further inside of you, idly rubbing her clit and massaging her boobs. Your pussy feels quite full when Sergey is all the way in, but it''s a good kind of full. A nice kind of full. Maybe you should visit Sergey more often...'
 		'When he slowly begins to thrust his cock in and out of you, you open your mouth and let out a soft moan. Sonia sees this as an invitation and grabs your hair, as she rubs her pussy against your lips eagerly. Her actions are making it perfectly clear: you''re supposed to service her with your mouth while you get fucked.'
-		'You do what is expected of you, and lick Sonia''s pussy as best you can. It''s fairly difficult, with Sergey fucking from behind at the same time, but you notice her breathing quickening and her biting her lip while she looks down at you. She looks rather cute when she''s squirming.'
-		'"Enjoying yourself over there, Sonia?" you teasingly ask between moans. Sonia grins mischievously, and punishes you by grabbing a firmer hold on your hair and roughly grinding her pussy against your mouth.'
+		'You do what is expected of you and lick Sonia''s pussy as best you can. It''s fairly difficult with Sergey fucking from behind at the same time, but you notice her breathing quickening and her biting her lip while she looks down at you. She looks rather cute when she''s squirming.'
+		'"Enjoying yourself over there, Sonia?" you teasingly ask between moans. Sonia grins mischievously and punishes you by grabbing a firmer hold on your hair and roughly grinding her pussy against your mouth.'
 		'Then Sergey decides it''s Sonia''s turn, and he makes her lie down on her back.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 5, 'sub', 'group'
 		gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', -5, 'lesbian', 'sub', 'group'
@@ -328,11 +328,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'serg_sex':
 			'You have a devious grin on your face when you see Sonia in her current position. She forced you to lick her when Sergey fucked you... well, two can play that game!'
 			'Sergey groans as he enters Sonia, the wetness of her pussy definitely easing his access to her. You must''ve done a good job with your mouth, getting her that worked up.'
 			'"Your turn to service me, dear..." you smirk, right before you lower your hips over Sonia''s mouth before she can protest.'
-			'Sonia is too enthralled by the large dick fucking her snatch, and mostly just moans and groans into your pussy when you grind your groin against her face.'
-			'Sergey is railing her quite roughly now, and since Sonia is not doing a good job of pleasing you, you encourage him: "Fuck that pussy, Sergey! No need to hold back on this whore''s slit, she can take it! Pleasing you is what she''s made for!"'
-			'Suddenly Sonia becomes far more eager to please you, and you feel her tongue actively rubbing against your clit. You smirk when you realize why; Sonia must understand that you''re the reason why Sergey is fucking her so roughly, and is trying to please you so you''ll choose her side again.'
+			'Sonia is too enthralled by the large dick fucking her snatch and mostly just moans and groans into your pussy when you grind your groin against her face.'
+			'Sergey is railing her quite roughly now, and since Sonia is not doing a good job of pleasing you, you encourage him. "Fuck that pussy, Sergey! No need to hold back on this whore''s slit, she can take it! Pleasing you is what she''s made for!"'
+			'Suddenly, Sonia becomes far more eager to please you, and you feel her tongue actively rubbing against your clit. You smirk when you realize why; Sonia must understand that you''re the reason why Sergey is fucking her so roughly and must be trying to please you so you''ll choose her side again.'
 			$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'She does such a good job, she brings you to an orgasm before you can stop her. You loudly groan and your body trembles over hers, causing Sergey to give you some confused looks.'
+			$orgasm_txt = 'She does such a good job she brings you to an orgasm before you can stop her. You loudly groan, and your body trembles over hers, causing Sergey to give you some confused looks.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian', 'dom', 'group'
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Continue':
@@ -343,10 +343,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'serg_sex':
 				pcs_hairbsh = 0
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/vanna/gr/ev1_4_'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'When Sergey is close to his orgasm, he stops fucking Sonia and orders the both of you to get down on your knees before him. Sergey readily puts his cock into Sonia''s mouth, and roars loudly as he drops his hot load of sperm onto her tongue.'
+				'When Sergey is close to his orgasm, he stops fucking Sonia and orders the both of you to get down on your knees before him. Sergey readily puts his cock into Sonia''s mouth and roars loudly as he drops his hot load of sperm onto her tongue.'
 				'Sonia swallows some of it, while you lick the sperm that she didn''t manage to swallow from Sergey''s cock and balls after he pulls out of Sonia''s mouth.'
 				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you horny minx!" Sonia exclaims. "I didn''t know you were such a slut for cum!"'
-				'You take Sergey''s cock in your hand and gently rub it, trying to milk the last bits of sperm out of him. Sonia kisses you greedily, and you taste Sergey''s sperm on her tongue when she does. When she breaks off the kiss, you lick her cheek. "Just cleaning up your face, you had some sperm there", you wink at her.'
+				'You take Sergey''s cock in your hand and gently rub it, trying to milk the last bits of sperm out of him. Sonia kisses you greedily, and you taste Sergey''s sperm on her tongue when she does. When she breaks off the kiss, you lick her cheek. "Just cleaning up your face, you had some sperm there," you wink at her.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Finish': gt'shulgahall'