Proofreading uni dorm

locations/uni_dorm.qsrc

@@ -14,7 +14,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Dormitory</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm.jpg"></center>'
-	'You walk up to the dorm building and head inside. It''s pretty clean and in good shape. An older woman, with a very unpleasant and judgmental look on her face sits in a room just off the main hallway. It has a partially glass wall and a window, splitting it from the main room. She looks up at you as you enter, her look telling you she''s already judging you as her face frowns into a look of disapproval.'
+	'You walk up to the dorm building and head inside. It''s pretty clean and in good shape. An older woman, with a very unpleasant and judgmental look on her face sits in a room just off the main hallway. It has a partially glass wall and window splitting it from the main room.'
+	'She glares up at you as you enter, her look telling you she''s already judging you as her face frowns into a look of disapproval.'
 	act 'Head outside':
 		minut += 1
 		killvar 'university_dorm'
@@ -190,7 +191,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'second_floor':
 				gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_shower_men'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Enter the men''s Shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Enter the men''s shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -253,11 +254,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'second_floor':
 			if $locat['A2'] = 'dormroom_ studying_or _relaxing':
 !				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big2.jpg"></center>'
 				if artemQW['artlie'] = 2 or artemQW['artembrokenheart'] = 1 or artemQW['artemblok'] = 1:
-					'You stand outside the dorm room, knocking on the door. The door is answered by Artem, who frowns as soon as he sees you. "I told you I never wanted to see you again! Please go away." He closes the door in your face without another word.'
+					'You stand outside the dorm room, knocking on the door. It''s soon answered by Artem, who frowns as soon as he sees you. "I told you I never wanted to see you again! Please go away."'
+					'He closes the door in your face without another word.'
 					act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'second_floor'
 				else
-					'You stand outside the dorm room, knocking on the door, hoping that Artem will come to the door.'
-					'Artem opens the door smiling. "Hi <<$pcs_nickname>>. Come in, I was just studying but I can take a break." Once you walk inside, he closes the door and heads to the couch and takes a seat.'
+					'You stand outside the dorm room, knocking on the door, hoping Artem will answer.'
+					'He soon opens the door with a smile. "Oh hey <<$pcs_nickname>>. I was just studying, but I can take a break."'
+					'Once you''re inside, he closes the door and heads to the couch to take a seat.'
 					act 'Enter': gt 'artem_dorm', 'start'
 				end
 			else
@@ -304,7 +307,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sixth_floor':
 				gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_shower_men'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Enter the men''s Shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Enter the men''s shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -377,7 +380,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'seventh_floor':
 				gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_shower_men'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Enter the men''s Shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Enter the men''s shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -476,9 +479,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'eighth_floor':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm_hall.jpg"></center>'
 	if func('homes_properties', 'has_access', 'university_dorm'):
-		'Before you is the usual dorm hallway with the dilapidated walls of the eighth floor. You can hear music and loud talking from drunk students escaping from some rooms, after living in the dorms for a bit. You now know this floor is often referred to as the African floor or the Blacks floor, all of the African students assigned to your dorm building where all assigned dorm rooms on this floor and no one else is assigned a room on this floor.'
+		'Before you is the usual dorm hallway with the dilapidated walls of the eighth floor. You can hear music and loud talking from drunk students escaping from some rooms. You''ve often heard this floor being referred to as the ''Black Site'' since only the African students are assigned rooms on this floor.'
 	else
-		'Before you is the usual dorm hallway with the dilapidated walls of the eighth floor. You can hear music you do notice the music sounds different, as in it is not the kind of music you are not as familiar with, their is also loud talking from some of the room. Most of it you can''t make out but sometimes when you can it is not in Russian.'
+		'Before you is the usual dorm hallway with the dilapidated walls of the eighth floor. You can hear music, but it sounds rather different to what you''re used to hearing and clearly isn''t Russian.'
 	end
 	if totminut > uni_dorm['event_minut']:
 		if hour > 2 and (week < 6 and hour < 15) or (week > 5 and hour < 11): 
@@ -501,7 +504,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'eighth_floor':
 				gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_shower_men'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Enter the men''s Shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Enter the men''s shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -519,11 +522,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'eighth_floor':
 		act 'Enter the men''s restroom (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 	end
 	if DjibrilQW['invite'] = 1:
-		act 'Djibril'' room':
+		act 'Djibril''s room':
 			*clr & cla
 			if (week <= 4 and hour >= 16 and hour < 23 and rand(1, 2) = 2) or (week = 6 and hour >= 9 and hour < 23 and rand(1, 2) = 2) or (week = 7 and hour >= 9 and hour < 23 and rand(1, 3) >= 2):
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big82.jpg"></center>'
-				'You knock on the door, and after a few seconds, Djibril opens it. He smiles as he notices it''s you. "I was hoping you would stop by <<$pcs_nickname>>. Come on in."'
+				'You knock on the door, and after a few seconds, Djibril opens it. He smiles as he notices it''s you. "I was hoping you would stop by. Come on in."'
 
 				act 'Enter': gt 'djibril', 'djibril_room'
 			else
@@ -532,7 +535,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'eighth_floor':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'You knock on the door, but no one answers. He must be asleep or not home.'
 
-				act 'Leave':gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
+				act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -540,7 +543,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'eighth_floor':
 	if meet_kendra = 1:
 		act 'Kendra''s room':
 			*clr & cla
-			if (week <= 4 and hour >= 17 and hour < 23 and rand(1, 2) = 2) or (week <= 6 and hour >= 9 and hour < 20 and rand(1, 2) = 2) or (week = 7 and hour >= 9 and hour < 23 and rand(1, 3) >= 2):
+			if (week <= 4 and hour >= 17 and hour < 23 and rand(1,2) = 2) or (week <= 6 and hour >= 9 and hour < 20 and rand(1,2) = 2) or (week = 7 and hour >= 9 and hour < 23 and rand(1,3) >= 2):
 				if kendra_busy ! daystart:
 					if rand(1,5) = 1:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/university/girl/kendra/door.jpg"></center>'
@@ -728,7 +731,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'tenth_floor':
 				gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_shower_men'
 			end
 		else
-			act 'Enter the men''s Shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Enter the men''s shower (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -762,14 +765,14 @@ if $args[0] = 'dorm_lounge':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b>Dorm Lounge</b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm_lounge.jpg"></center>'
-	'This is the large shared lounge for this floor. It is fairly tidy, with a few little squares. A tv on along a wall creates one side of the square while couches or chairs make up the other three sides, with just enough space between them to allow people to enter or leave the little squares. Several such entertainment squares line the room with a few vending machines.'
+	'This is the large shared lounge for this floor. Couches and chairs clustered around a TV on the wall create a square for groups of people to sit at, with just enough space between them to allow people to enter or leave. Several of these squares line the room along with a few vending machines.'
 	'A free <a href="exec: newspaperVars[''dbag''] = 0 & gs ''newspaper'', ''start''">newspaper</a> is available.'
 
 	act 'Return to the corridor': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
-	act 'Watch tv': gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_lounge_watch_tv'
+	act 'Watch TV': gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_lounge_watch_tv'
 	act 'Relax': gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_lounge_relax'
 	!!act 'Buy snacks':
-!!I commented this out because I have no clue how to do this, if you know how to do it. Just have it charge what the kiosk does for snacks/drink and then return to this room.
+!!I commented this out because I have no clue how to do this. If you know how to do it, just have it charge what the kiosk does for snacks/drinks then return to this room.
 end
 
 if $args[0] = 'dorm_lounge_watch_tv':
@@ -785,9 +788,9 @@ if $args[0] = 'dorm_lounge_watch_tv':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b>Dorm Lounge TV</b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm_lounge.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take a seat on one of the couches and watch a little tv, there is not a lot on but it kills a little time.'
+	'You take a seat on one of the couches to watch something on the TV. There''s not much on, but it kills a little time.'
 	act 'Return to the corridor': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
-	act 'Keep watching tv': gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_lounge_watch_tv'
+	act 'Keep watching': gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_lounge_watch_tv'
 end
 
 if $args[0] = 'dorm_lounge_relax':
@@ -803,7 +806,7 @@ if $args[0] = 'dorm_lounge_relax':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b>Dorm Lounge Relax</b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm_lounge.jpg"></center>'
-	'You take a seat on one of the couches and just chill out for a bit relaxing.'
+	'You take a seat on one of the couches and just chill out for few minutes.'
 	act 'Return to the corridor': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	act 'Keep relaxing': gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_lounge_relax'
 end
@@ -824,13 +827,13 @@ if $args[0] = 'dorm_kitchen':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b>Dorm Kitchen</b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm_kitchen.jpg"></center>'
-	'The large shared kitchen for this floor. It is fairly tidy, with a lot of cabinets along two of the walls. Two ovens and two refrigerators, as well as several tables with chairs around them, are scattered around the room.'
+	'The large shared kitchen for this floor. It''s fairly tidy, with a lot of cabinets along two of the walls, two ovens and two refrigerators, and several tables with chairs around them scattered about the room.'
 	if (locat['katja'] = 32 or locat['katja'] = 33) and $uni_dorm['floor'] = 'second_floor':
 		if katjaQW['kitchen_day'] ! daystart:
 			'You see '+iif(katjaQW['know_katja_uni'] = 0 and ($start_type['loc'] ! 'sg' and $start_type['magic'] = 'tg'), 'a cute redheaded girl', '<a href="exec:gt ''katja_pantyquest'', ''kitchen''">Katja</a>')+iif((katjaQW['pantiesQWstage'] < 3 or (katjaQW['pantiesQWstage'] = 3 and katjaQW['slut'] < 65) or katjaQW['pantiesQWstage'] = 4) and katjaQW['take_of_panties_day'] ! daystart, 'sitting in a chair.', 'standing at the kitchen table.')
 		else
 			if locat['katja'] = 32:
-				'You see '+iif(katjaQW['know_katja_uni'] = 0 and ($start_type['loc'] ! 'sg' and $start_type['magic'] = 'tg'), 'a cute redheaded girl', 'Katja')+' at the kitchen tables coking.'
+				'You see '+iif(katjaQW['know_katja_uni'] = 0 and ($start_type['loc'] ! 'sg' and $start_type['magic'] = 'tg'), 'a cute redheaded girl', 'Katja')+' cooking.'
 			else
 				'You see '+iif(katjaQW['know_katja_uni'] = 0 and ($start_type['loc'] ! 'sg' and $start_type['magic'] = 'tg'), 'a cute redheaded girl', 'Katja')+' at the table eating her dinner.'
 			end
@@ -924,7 +927,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_shower_men':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Dormitory - Men''s Communal Showers</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/showers/empty.jpg"></center>'
-	'You open the door and walk down to the end of the L shaped hall to peek around the corner. In the nearest corner is a small alcove of lockers and a couple of benches, closest to the entry point is two rows of sinks and <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirrors</a>. On the other side of the room a walk way leads off to the communal <a href="exec:gt ''uni_dorm'', ''mens_shower''">showers</a>.'
+	'You open the door and walk down to the end of the L shaped hall to peek around the corner. In the nearest corner is a small alcove with lockers, a few benches, two rows of sinks and some <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirrors</a>. On the other side of the room is a walkway that leads off to the communal <a href="exec:gt ''uni_dorm'', ''mens_shower''">showers</a>.'
 	act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	dynamic $tampon
 	dynamic $quickwash
@@ -946,7 +949,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_shower_women':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Dormitory - Women''s Communal Showers</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/showers/empty.jpg"></center>'
-	'You open the door and walk down to the end of the L shaped hall, which takes you to the main area of the communal shower room. In the nearest corner is a small alcove of lockers and a couple of benches, closest to the entry point is two rows of sinks and <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirrors</a>. On the other side of the room a walk way leads off to the communal <a href="exec:gt ''uni_dorm'', ''womens_shower''">showers</a>.'
+	'You open the door and walk down to the end of the L shaped hall, which takes you to the main area of the communal shower room. In the nearest corner is a small alcove with lockers, a few benches, two rows of sinks and some <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirrors</a>. On the other side of the room is a walkway that leads off to the communal <a href="exec:gt ''uni_dorm'', ''womens_shower''">showers</a>.'
 	act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	dynamic $tampon
 	dynamic $quickwash
@@ -967,7 +970,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mens_shower':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Dormitory - Men''s Showers</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/showers/empty_showers.jpg"></center>'
-	'The room is currently empty, inside you can see a line of showers with small baskets on the wall just under the shower heads to store your shampoo and other products in while someone showers. There is a small drain in the floor.'
+	'The room is currently empty, but you can see a line of showers with small baskets on the wall just under the shower heads to store shampoo and other products.'
 	act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_shower_men'
 	gs 'din_van', 'private'
 end
@@ -986,7 +989,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'womens_shower':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Dormitory - Women''s Showers</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/showers/empty_showers.jpg"></center>'
-	'The room is currently empty, inside you can see a line of showers with small baskets on the wall just under the shower heads to store your shampoo and other products in while someone showers. There is a small drain in the floor.'
+	'The room is currently empty, but you can see a line of showers with small baskets on the wall just under the shower heads to store shampoo and other products.'
 	act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'dorm_shower_women'
 	gs 'din_van', 'private'
 end
@@ -1011,7 +1014,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_room':
 	'<center><b>Your dorm room</b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm_room/room.jpg"></center>'
 	'This is the dorm room you share with Vika.'
-	'Your <a href="exec:gt ''bed'',''start''">bed</a> is positioned in one of the corners of the room. Your <a href="exec:gt ''stol'' ,''start''">desk</a> sits at the foot of it.'
+	'Your <a href="exec:gt ''bed'',''start''">bed</a> is positioned in one of the corners of the room, with your <a href="exec:gt ''stol'' ,''start''">desk</a> sitting at the foot of it.'
 	if $ml_guitar['location'] = $loc: 'Your guitar rests on its stand next to your bed.'
 	if mc_inventory['mag_porn'] > 0: 'You''ve hidden your porn magazines under the mattress of your bed.'
 	
@@ -1020,7 +1023,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_room':
 		vika_inroom = 1
 		vika_sleep = 0
 		if npc_rel['A220'] >= 60 and birthday = day and birthmonth = month and vikaslut = 1 and b_vika_present_Day ! daystart:
-			$vikatext = '<a href="exec:gt''Vika''">Vika</a> seems excited when she notices you. She is trying to hide a box behind her back.'
+			$vikatext = '<a href="exec:gt''Vika''">Vika</a> seems excited when she notices you. She''s trying to hide a box behind her back.'
 		else
 			$vikatext = '<a href="exec:gt''Vika''">Vika</a> is lying on her bed.'
 		end
@@ -1031,7 +1034,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_room':
 		if vikaslut = 0:
 			$vikatext = '<a href="exec:gt''Vika''">Vika</a> is sleeping in her bed after being out the whole night.'
 		elseif vikaslut = 1:
-			$vikatext = '<a href="exec:gt''Vika''">Vika</a> is sleeping in her bed after working hard in the brothel all night.'
+			$vikatext = '<a href="exec:gt''Vika''">Vika</a> is sleeping in her bed after working in the brothel all night.'
 		end
 		gs 'music_actions', 'no_music'
 	end

locations/uni_dorm_events.qsrc

@@ -8,46 +8,46 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_floor':
 	uni_dorm['event_minut'] = totminut + 60
 	if temp = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/2girl_hump1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you see two girls grinding and dancing provocatively against each other while another takes photos with her phone. As a couple of boys a little ways away watch the girls drying humping each other in the hallway. You wonder as you pass them by if the girls are just doing it to get the boys attention or if they are doing it because they are into it.'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you see two girls grinding and dancing provocatively against each other while another takes photos with her phone. Some boys are also watching them. As you pass by, you wonder if they''re just doing it to get the boys attention or if they''re actually into it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/3naked_girls3.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you''re greeted by three tipsy, giggling, completely naked girls passing you by. The dark haired one of the group looks familiar, you''re sure you''ve seen her around campus before, and she just so happens to be getting her breasts groped from behind from one of her friends. They push by you and continue into the stairwell, leaving you to imagine just where they''re off to next.'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you''re greeted by three tipsy, giggling, completely naked girls. The dark haired one looks familiar and you''re sure you''ve seen her around campus before; she doesn''t seem to mind as her friend gropes at her breasts. They push by you and continue into the stairwell, leaving you to imagine where they''re off to next.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/4girls_running.jpg"></center>'
-		'You walk down the mostly quiet hall when suddenly four girls come screaming and laughing down the hallway at you at full speed! You dodge out of the way and they continue sprinting away. What was THAT about?'
+		'You walk down the mostly quiet hall when four girls suddenly come screaming and laughing down the hallway at you at full speed. You dodge out of the way and they continue sprinting away. What was that about?'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 4:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/naked_couple1.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you see a totally naked girl riding on the back of a totally naked guy. This place is crazy sometimes!'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you see a naked girl riding on the back of a naked guy. This place is truly crazy sometimes!'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/naked_girl1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You walk down the hallway of the six floor when suddenly one of the dorm room doors opens and a completely naked girl steps into view, then walks down the hall to communal showers.'
+		'As you walk down the hallway, one of the dorm room doors suddenly opens and a naked girl steps into view and casually walks down the hall to the communal showers.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 6:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/naked_girls_group2.jpg"></center>'
-		'There''s loud, booming music on the sixth floor of the dorms today. As you walk though it''s easy to tell where it''s coming from; an open door at the end of the hall where a group of semi and completely nude girls are running in out with drinks in hand. Seeing how much fun they''re having you almost consider asking them for a drink, but only for a moment, before you decide to just keep on walking.'
+		'There''s loud, booming music coming from an open door at the end of the hallway as a group of semi and completely nude girls come running in and out with drinks in hand. Seeing how much fun they''re having, you almost consider joining them before you decide to just keep walking.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 7:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/naked_guy_lock.jpg"></center>'
-		'There''s some definite drama going on up here today. You see a totally stripped guy pleading with someone through the locked dorm room door. This has obviously gone on for a while already seeing as other girls have congregated outside their own rooms to watch the show, all snickering and taking photos of the banished young man.'
+		'There''s some definite drama going on today. You see a naked guy pleading with someone through a locked dorm room door. This has obviously gone on for a while already seeing as other girls have congregated outside their own rooms to watch the show, all snickering and taking photos of the banished young man.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -61,25 +61,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_floor':
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 9:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/splits_girl.jpg"></center>'
-		'There''s a few girls gathered in the hallway today, talking amongst themselves. You hear one of them dare the other to do a handstand. Almost immediately she takes off her shoes and balances herself against the wall before flipping up onto her hands. This causes her skirt to drop over her waist however, exposing her panties to her friends, as well as a few passing guys. The girl quickly drops back to her face, her cheeks flushed with embarrassment.'
+		'There''s a few girls gathered in the hallway today, talking amongst themselves. You hear one of them dare the other to do a handstand. Almost immediately, she takes off her shoes and balances herself against the wall before flipping up onto her hands. This causes her skirt to drop over her waist however, exposing her panties to her friends, as well as a few passing guys. The girl quickly drops back to her feet, her cheeks flushed with embarrassment.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 10:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/topless_girl1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You pass several people walking around in just their underwear or in the case of one girl she is completely naked. No one seems to take all that much notice of each other as they get on with their daily routine.'
+		'You pass several people walking around in their underwear or, in the case of one girl, completely naked. No one seems to take much notice as they get on with their daily routine.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm_hall.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hallway you can''t help but hear some noises coming from one of the rooms. You stop near the door and listen a moment but you can''t make it out. You could try the door and see if it is unlocked... or maybe you should mind your own business.'
+		'As you walk down the hallway, you hear some noises coming from one of the rooms. You stop near the door and listen, but you can''t make it out. You could try the door and see if it''s unlocked or just mind your own business.'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 		act 'Try the door':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/spy/peep3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop up to the door and check the handle, it turns easily in your hands, so it is not locked. But do you dare peep and see what is going on? Are you that kind of person? Or should you just go on? You feel torn, you really want to know, but what if someone see''s?'
+			'You step up to the door and check the handle. It turns easily in your hand, so it''s not locked, but do you peep? You really want to know what''s happening, but what if someone sees you?'
 			act 'Don''t peek': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 			act 'Peek': gt 'uni_dorm_events', 'dorm_floor_sex'
 		end
@@ -92,191 +92,195 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_floor_sex':
 	temp = rand(1,27)
 	if temp = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_2wm_orgy1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see two girls riding two guys reverse cowgirl style, toasting each other with drinks as they fuck the guys beneath them. They seem to be having a lot of fun drinking while they fuck, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see two girls riding two guys reverse cowgirl style, toasting each other with drinks as they fuck the guys beneath them. They seem to be having a lot of fun, so you close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_2wm_orgy2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see two girls riding two guys reverse cowgirl style, high fiving each other as they fuck the guys beneath them. They seem to be having a lot of fun drinking while they fuck, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see two girls riding two guys reverse cowgirl style, high fiving each other as they fuck the guys beneath them. They seem to be having a lot of fun, so you close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_cuni1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see one girl straddling another girls face, she moans loudly as she is obviously being eaten out by the other one, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see one girl straddling another girl''s face and moaning loudly as she''s eaten out. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 4:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_cuni2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see one girl on her elbows and knees with another girl behind her with her face buried in the first girls crotch, obviously eating her out as the first girl moans loudly, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see one girl on all fours with another girl behind her, her face buried in her pussy as she eats her out. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_cuni3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see two girls sixty-nining each other, both moaning loudly as they do, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see two girls sixty-nining each other, both moaning loudly as they do. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 6:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_strap_anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a brunette on the bed on all fours, while a blond kneels behind her wearing a strapon. The blond is roughly fucking the brunette in the ass with the strapon as she says. "What the fuck did I tell you about fucking my boyfriend."'
-		'The brunette doesn''t seem to be enjoying the ass fucking she is getting. "I''m sorry... I was drunk... please stop... it hurts."'
-		'The blond shakes her head. "Not until I am convinced you have learned your lesson." She says as she keeps fucking apparently her friend? While curious to know the whole story you quietly close the door before you get caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a brunette on the bed on all fours while a blonde wearing a strap-on roughly fucks her in the ass.'
+		'"What the fuck did I tell you about fucking my boyfriend?" the blonde asks as she slams the dildo deep into the brunette''s ass, causing her to loudly squeal.'
+		'"I''m sorry! I was drunk! Please stop, it hurts!" she cries out, seemingly not enjoying what''s happening.'
+		'The blonde shakes her head. "Not until I''m convinced you''ve learned your lesson!" she says as she keeps fucking the other girl. While curious to know the whole story, you quietly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 7:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_strap1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a blond wearing a strapon fucking a brunette''s pussy with it, the brunette seems to be loving it. Just as you are about to close the door the blond looks over and see''s you. "What the fuck! Close the door pervert!" You blush and quickly close the door.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a blonde wearing a strap-on fucking a brunette''s pussy, the brunette seemingly loving it.'
+		'Just as you''re about to close the door, the blonde looks over and sees you. "What the fuck?! Fuck off, pervert!"'
+		'You blush and quickly close the door.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 8:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_wm_3some1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on the bed on his back with his legs hanging off the edge of it. One girl rides his dick reverse cowgirl style, while another sits on the guys face. The cowgirl is looking right at you when you open the door, you blush and quickly close the door.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on the bed on his back as one girl rides his dick reverse cowgirl style and another sits on his face. The cowgirl is looking right at you when you open the door, so you quickly close the door while blushing.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 9:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_wm_3some2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a blond on all fours with another girl sitting in front of her with her legs spread wide, obviously waiting to be eaten out by the blond. Behind the blond is a guy stroking his dick to make it hard, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door just wide enough to look inside. You see a blonde on all fours with another girl sitting in front of her with her legs spread wide, waiting to be eaten out. Behind the blonde is a guy stroking his dick to make it hard. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 10:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_wm_3some3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on his back on the bed, one girl kneels next to his face and starts making out with him shortly after you open the door, another girl is kneeling by his waist and has been giving him a blow job since your peeked in the door, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on the bed making out with one girl as another gives him a loud and sloppy blowjob. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 11:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/2wf_wm_3some4.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on his back on the bed, while one girl is straddling his face, while another one is riding his dick cowgirl style. The two girls facing each other are making out as they ride the guy, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on the bed with one girl straddling his face as another one rides his dick cowgirl style. The two girls are making out as they ride the guy. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 12:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_2wm_3some1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked girl on all fours on a couch, while a guy is fucking her from behind. As she is getting fucked she is looking and smiling at a second guy that is watching her get fucked and jerking off, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked girl on all fours on a couch while a guy fucks her from behind. She''s smiling at a second guy who''s watching while jerking off. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 13:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_2wm_3some2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a girl on all fours on the bed, sucking one guy off in front of her while a second guy fucks her from behind, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a girl on all fours on the bed, sucking one guy off while a second guy fucks her from behind. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 14:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_2wm_dp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on the a bed while a girl straddles him riding him cowgirl style. As you watch another guy comes up behind her, his dick disappears between her butt cheeks as she cries out. She continues to ride the guy beneath her as the other one fucks her ass from behind, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on the bed while a girl straddles him, riding him cowgirl style as another guy comes up behind her. She cries out as his dick disappears into her ass, but she continues to ride the guy beneath her as the other one starts fucking her ass. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 15:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_2wm_dp2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on the floor while a girl straddles him riding him cowgirl style. As you watch another guy comes up behind her, and pushes her forward until she is laying on top of the first guy. You watch as the second guys dick disappears between her butt cheeks as grunts. She continues to ride the guy beneath her as the other one fucks her ass from behind, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy laying on the floor while a girl straddles him, riding him cowgirl style as you watch another guy come up behind her and push her forward before his dick disappears into her ass. She continues to ride the guy beneath her as the other one starts fucking her ass. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 16:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_5wm_gb1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You look inside and see a girl kneeling bent over with three guys in front of her. She is sucking the dick of one of them while jerking the other two off with her hands, a fourth guy has his dick shoved up her ass fucking her nice and hard. While a fifth guys stands next to them all jerking off, waiting his turn, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a girl bent over with three guys in front of her, sucking the dick of one while jerking the other two off as a fourth guy has his dick shoved up her ass. A fifth guys stands next to them jerking off while waiting his turn. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 17:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a girl on all fours on the bed, while a guy is fucking her ass from behind. By the sounds of her moans it sounds like she is enjoying it as much as he is, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a girl on all fours on the bed as a guy fucks her ass from behind. By the sounds of her moans, she''s enjoying it as much as he is. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 18:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_anal2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy sitting on a couch with a girl riding him reverse cowgirl style, though his dick is in her ass instead of her pussy, she is riding him hard and moaning loudly. She seems to be enjoying being fucked in the butt more than he seems to be and he seems to be really enjoying himself, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a guy sitting on a couch as a girl rides him reverse cowgirl style with his dick in her ass. They both seem to be enjoying themselves, so you quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 19:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_anal3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. The first thing you hear is the girl begging. "Please not my ass... please it hurts." As you look you see a girl naked from the waist down bent over the seat of a couch, while a guy roughly fucks her behind, the next thing you notice is her hands are handcuffed behind her back. "Just relax and it won''t hurt so much, you agreed to try it." He says as he keeps savagely fucking her ass, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. The first thing you hear is the girl begging. "Not my ass... Please, it hurts!" As you look inside, you see a girl naked from the waist down bent over the seat of a couch as a guy roughly fucks her ass. You notice her hands are handcuffed behind her back.'
+		'"Just relax and it won''t hurt so much! You agreed to try it," he says as he keeps savagely fucking her ass. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 20:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_bj1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked guy standing there with a naked girl kneeling in front of him, her head bobs back and forth as she sucks his dick, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked guy standing in the room with a naked girl kneeling in front of him, her head bobbing back and forth as she sucks his dick. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 21:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_bj2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A guy lays on his back on the bed, while a girl kneels between his between his legs sucking his dick, her head bobbing up and down as she does, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A guy lays on his back on the bed as a girl kneels between his legs sucking his dick, her head bobbing up and down as she does. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 22:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_cowgirl1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A guy lays on his back on the bed while a girl rides his dick cowgirl style they seem to be really enjoying themselves. So much so they high five each other in the middle of it, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. A guy lays on his back on the bed while a girl rides his dick cowgirl style. They seem to be really enjoying themselves, so much so that they high five each other in the middle of it. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 23:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_cuni1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A naked girl is on all fours on a bed, while a guy kneels behind her, with his face buried in her ass. She is moaning loudly, as he eats her out from behind, just as you are about to close the door he looks right at you and your eyes meet, then he gives you a double thumbs up. Blushing you quickly close the door.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. A naked girl is on all fours on the bed while a guy kneels behind her with his face buried in her ass. She''s moaning loudly as he eats her out. Just as you''re about to close the door, he looks right at you and gives you a double thumbs up. Blushing, you quickly close the door.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 24:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_cuni2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A naked guy lays on a cough on his back while a girl naked from the waist down rides his face, as you watch she looks over at you and grins, having been caught peeking you blush bright red and quickly close the door.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. A naked guy lays on a couch while a girl, naked from the waist down, rides his face. As you watch, she looks over at you and grins. You blush bright red before quickly closing the door.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 25:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_vag1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A girl naked from the waist down lays on her back with her legs against her body, while a guy practically lays on top of her fucking her missionary style, you think you rarely see anyone doing missionary much anymore as you quietly close the door and leave.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. A girl, naked from the waist down, lays on her back with her legs against her body while a guy practically lays on top of her fucking her missionary style. You quietly close the door and leave.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	elseif temp = 26:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/bf_3wm_voyeur1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked black girl laying on her side on the bed, with a white guy laying behind her fucking her. Two more white guys are crowded near the couple watching them as the guy fucks her, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked black girl laying on her side on the bed, with a white guy laying behind her fucking her. Two more white guys are watching them. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', $uni_dorm['floor']
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor/sex/wf_wm_vag2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A naked girl is on all fours on a bed, while a naked guy is fucking her from behind. She keeps egging him on to go harder and faster which he tries to the best of his ability, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. A naked girl is on all fours on a bed while a naked guy is fucking her from behind. She keeps egging him on to go harder, which he tries to the best of his ability. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -291,53 +295,56 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_floor8':
 	temp = rand(1,8)
 	if temp = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/cuffed_girl.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you see a naked white girl standing next to a dorm room door. Her hands are handcuffed behind her back, with another pair of cuffs with a short chain is cuffed around each of her ankles. When she notices you coming down the hall she blushes and hides her face, obviously embarrassed. You have no clue why she is out in the hallway like that but it is none of your business as she seems to be going along with it.'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you see a naked white girl standing next to a dorm room door. Her hands are handcuffed behind her back, with another pair of cuffs with a short chain cuffed around each of her ankles. When she notices you coming down the hall, she blushes and hides her face. You have no clue why she''s out in the hallway like this, but she seems to be going along with it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/ebony_lezdom.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you''re greeted by a ebony girl pinning a white girl against the wall. She has one of her hands wrapped around the white girls neck while the  other one slides down the white girls body to her crotch, where the black girl roughly grabs the white girl by the cunt, causing the white girl to wince in obvious pain.' 
-		'"What the fuck did I tell you, you little whore?" The ebony girl says.'
-		'The white girl responds. "I''m sorry but it hurt, his dick was to big." It seems you have come into the middle of their conversation.'
-		'The ebony girl twists her hand in the white girl girls crotch, causing her to winces more. "I don''t fucking care if it hurts, I bet this hurts even more doesn''t it?"'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you''re greeted by an ebony girl pinning a white girl against the wall. She has one of her hands wrapped around the white girl''s neck while the other slides down to her crotch, where she roughly grabs the girl by the pussy, causing her to wince in pain.' 
+		'"What the fuck did I tell you, you little whore?" the ebony girl asks.'
+		'"I''m sorry, but his dick was too big! It hurt!" she replies.'
+		'The ebony girl twists her hand in the girl''s crotch, causing her to wince even more. "I don''t fucking care if it hurt. I bet this hurts even more, doesn''t it?"'
 		*nl
-		'The white girl nods. "That''s right, the next time I sell your skinny white ass to one of the brothers on this floor and he wants to fuck that tight little ass of yours. You are going to take it and not tell him to stop, instead you are going to tell him to fuck your ass harder. You got it?"'
-		'The white girl nods and the breaths a sigh of relief as the black girl lets go of her. "We have this conversation again and you are going to really regret it." When the white girl nods again the ebony girl continues. "Good now get down to room eight twelve, there''s a few boys expecting you." With that the white girl hurries down the hallway, stopping to knock on a door, when it opens she goes inside. The ebony girl looks at you as you pass. "What the fuck you looking it?" Then she goes into the dorm room she was standing next to, you have to wonder if she is pimping out the other girl, it sure sounded like she was.'
+		'The white girl winces, but nods.'
+		'"That''s right. Next time I sell your white ass to one of the brothers on this floor and he wants to fuck that tight little ass of yours, you''re going to take it, and you''re going to tell him to fuck your ass harder. Got it?" the ebony girl barks.'
+		'The white girl nods and breathes a sigh of relief as the black girl lets go of her. "We have this conversation again and you''re going to <i>really</i> regret it..."'
+		'When the white girl nods, the ebony girl continues. "Good. Now get down to room 812. There''s a few boys there expecting you."'
+		'The white girl hurries down the hallway as the ebony girl looks at you. "What the fuck you looking at?" she asks before she heads into what you assume is her dorm room.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/ir_kiss' + rand(1,2) + '.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you spot a couple, a white girl with a black guy. They stop in front of one of the doors and make up for a few moments before the guy unlocks the door and leads the girl into his room.'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you spot a white girl with a black guy. They stop in front of one of the doors and make out for a few seconds before the guy unlocks the door and leads the girl into his room.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 4:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/naked_wgirl.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you see a totally naked girl, standing in front of one of the dorm room doors knocking, a few moments later a black guy opens the door. He looks the girl over with a huge smile, stepping aside to let her walk in. He looks to you a gives you a wink as he closes the door.'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you see a totally naked girl knocking on one of the dorm room doors. A few seconds later, a black guy opens the door and looks the girl over with a huge smile before stepping aside to let her in. He looks at you and gives you a wink as he closes the door.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/party_girl.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you meet a girl coming the other way. She is wearing a tight black skirt, with a black bra visible under her black sheer top. She seems a bit unsteady on her feet, stumbling a bit as she walks, she gives you a friendly smile as she walks past you. You can''t tell if she is drunk or high, or possible both.'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you meet a girl coming the other way. She''s wearing a tight black skirt, her black bra visible under her black sheer top. She seems a little unsteady on her feet, stumbling as she gives you a friendly smile. You can''t tell if she''s drunk, high or both.'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 6:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/wg_bm.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hall, you see a white girl being followed by a black guy, she stops in front of one of the dorm room doors and opens it. As she does the guy gives her ass a hard slap, causing her to yelp a bit. She turns to give him a look, but you are unsure if she was into it or not, but if not it doesn''t seem to bother her that much as she walks into the dorm room, followed by the guy who closes the door once they are inside.'
+		'As you walk down the hall, you see a white girl being followed by a black guy. She stops in front of one of the dorm room doors and opens it. As she does, the guy gives her a hard slap on the ass, causing her to yelp. You''re unsure if she''s into it or not as she walks into the dorm room. The guy quickly follows her inside and closes the door.'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/dorm_hall.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk down the hallway you can''t help but hear some noises coming from one of the rooms. You stop near the door and listen a moment but you can''t make it out. You could try the door and see if it is unlocked... or maybe you should mind your own business.'
+		'As you walk down the hallway, you hear some noises coming from one of the rooms. You stop near the door and listen, but you can''t make it out. You could try the door and see if it''s unlocked or just mind your own business.'
 		act 'Keep going': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 		act 'Try the door':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/spy/peep3.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop up to the door and check the handle, it turns easily in your hands, so it is not locked. But do you dare peep and see what is going on? Are you that kind of person? Or should you just go on? You feel torn, you really want to know, but what if someone see''s?'
+			'You step up to the door and check the handle. It turns easily in your hand, so it''s not locked, but do you peep? You really want to know what''s happening, but what if someone sees you?'
 			act 'Don''t peek': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 			act 'Peek': gt 'uni_dorm_events', 'dorm_floor_eight_sex'
 		end
@@ -350,203 +357,203 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'dorm_floor_eight_sex':
 	temp = rand(1,29)
 	if temp = 1:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/2bf_1wf1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a white girl laying on the floor on her back with a black girl straddling her face getting eaten out, while another black girl kneels next to them rubbing her clit as she watches. Over on the couch a couple of guys watch the girls, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a white girl laying on the floor on her back with a black girl straddling her face, getting eaten out while another black girl kneels next to them rubbing her clit as she watches. Over on the couch is a few guys watching the girls. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/2bf_1wf2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a couple of black girls laying on the floor with their legs spread wide, both of them are rubbing the clit of one of the girls, while a white girl is laying on her stomach with her head between the legs of the other girl eating her out, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see some black girls laying on the floor with their legs spread wide. One is rubbing the clit of the other, while a white girl is laying on her stomach with her head between the legs of the other girl eating her out. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 3:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/2bf_strap_vag1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a pair of black girls, one of them is bent over while he friend stands behind her wearing a strapon, fucking her from behind, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a pair of black girls inside. One of them is bent over while her friend stands behind her wearing a strap-on, fucking her from behind. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 4:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/2bf_wm_3some1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a white guy laying on his back on the bed, one black girl straddles his face as she is eaten out by him. The other one straddles his waist and rides his cock cowgirl style, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a white guy laying on his back on the bed as one black girl straddles his face as another rides his cock cowgirl style. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 5:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/2bm_2wf_anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see two black guys laying on the bed on their back, while two white girls straddle them reverse cowgirl style. Both girls asses are being impaled by the black cocks under them, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see two black guys laying on the bed as two white girls straddle them reverse cowgirl style with their cocks in their asses. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 6:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/2bm_wf_3some1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a white girl laying on her back on the bed, being fucked in the missionary position by a black guy. She is sucking the dick of a second black guy as she is getting fucked, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a white girl laying on her back on the bed, being fucked in the missionary position by a black guy as she sucks the dick of a second black guy. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 7:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/3bm_3wf_orgy1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see three white girls, two laying on their back on a bed getting fucked by by two black guys. While the third girl is on her knees on the edge of the bed being fucked from behind by a third black guy, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see three white girls, two laying on their back on the bed getting fucked by two black guys while the third is on her knees on the edge of the bed being fucked from behind by a third black guy. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 8:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/3bm_wf_dp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy on his back on the floor, while a white girl straddles him, laying across his chest. A second black guy is fucking her ass from behind, while a third black guy is kneeling next to her head as she sucks his dick, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy on his back on the floor as a white girl lays across his chest. A second black guy is fucking her ass from behind while a third is kneeling next to her head as she sucks his dick. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 9:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/4bm_wf_dp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy laying on the floor on his back, while a white girl straddles him and lays on top of him. A second black guy is fucking her ass from behind, while two more black guys stand around naked watching them stroking their dicks. Those two must be waiting their turn to fuck the girl, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy laying on the floor on his back as a white girl lays on top of him. A second black guy is fucking her ass from behind while two more black guys are watching them while stroking their dicks, seemingly awaiting their turn. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 10:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/5bm_2wf_orgy1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see two white girls laying on their back on a bed, while two black guys fuck them missionary style. Three more black guys are naked crowded around stroking their dicks, obviously waiting for their turn to fuck the girls, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see two white girls laying on their backs on the bed as two black guys fuck them missionary style. Three more black guys are crowded around stroking their dicks, waiting for their turn to fuck the girls. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 11:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/5bm_wf_gb1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a white girl on her hands and knees on the bed being fucked from behind by a black guy. A second black guy kneels next to her head while she sucks his dick, a third black guy is naked and stroking his dick obviously waiting his turn. A fourth black guy is just finished getting undressed, while a fifth black guy still clothed is filming it all on his phone, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a white girl on all fours on the bed being fucked from behind by a black guy as a second kneels next to her head as she sucks his dick, a third is stroking his dick while waiting his turn, a fourth has just finished getting undressed and a fifth is filming it all on his phone. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 12:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/7bm_wf_orgy1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy laying on his back on the couch, with a white girl straddling him taking his cock. A second black guy stands next to her head as she sucks his cock, while a third black back guy stands behind her fucking her in the ass. Standing behind the third guy is four more naked black guys all stroking their cocks waiting their turn to fuck the girl, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy laying on his back on the couch as a white girl rides his cock while sucking a second guy''s dick and a third fucks her in the ass. Standing by and stroking their dicks is four more black guys all waiting their turn to fuck the girl. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 13:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_2wm_dp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a white guy laying on the couch with a black girl straddling him riding his cock cowgirl style, while a second white guy fucks her ass from behind, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a white guy laying on the couch with a black girl riding his cock cowgirl style as a second white guy fucks her ass from behind. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 14:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_bm_anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy laying on the bed on his back while a black girl impales her ass on his cock reverse cowgirl style, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy laying on the bed on his back as a black girl impales her ass on his cock reverse cowgirl style. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 15:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_bm_bj1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on her back on the bed, while sucking the cock of the black guy kneeling next to her head, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on her back on the bed while sucking the cock of a black guy. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 16:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_bm_vag1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy sitting on the couch while a black girl impales her pussy on his cock reverse cowgirl style, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black guy sitting on the couch while a black girl rides his cock reverse cowgirl style. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 17:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_bm_vag2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl on her knees bent over on the couch, while a black man stands behind her fucking her from behind, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl on her knees bent over on the couch as a black man fucks her from behind. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 18:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_bm_vag3.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on a bed, naked from the waist down. While a black guy fucks her pussy missionary style, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on a bed, naked from the waist down as a black guy fucks her pussy missionary style. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 19:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_wf_strap_vag1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a white girl on all fours on the couch while a black girl wears a strapon and fucks her pussy from behind. As you watch the black girl looks over at you and your eyes meet and she grins widely, blushing you quickly close the door and leave.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a white girl on all fours on the couch while a black girl wearing a strap-on fucks her pussy from behind. As you watch, the black girl looks over at you and grins widely. Blushing, you quickly close the door and leave.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 20:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_wf_cuni1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on her back on the bed with her legs spread wide, while a white girl on her hands and knees has her face buried in the black girls crotch licking her pussy, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on her back on the bed with her legs spread wide as a white girl is on all fours licks her pussy. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 21:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_wm_anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on her side while a white guy lays on his side behind her with his dick up her ass. They lay there as he fucks her ass, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on her side while a white guy lays on his side behind her with his dick up her ass. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 22:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_wm_bj1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A white guy lays on his back on the bed while a black girl lays next to him sucking his dick, her head bobbing up and down. One of his free hands is between her legs rubbing her clit, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. A white guy lays on his back on the bed while a black girl lays next to him sucking his dick, her head bobbing up and down as one of his free hands rubs her clit. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 23:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_wm_cuni1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked black girl laying on the bed with her legs spread wide, while a partially dressed white guy has his face buried in her crotch licking her pussy. As you watch the girl turns her head and looks right at you, she gives you a dirty look when your eyes meet, blushing you close the door and leave.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked black girl laying on the bed, her legs spread wide as a partially dressed white guy has his face buried in her crotch licking her pussy. As you watch, the girl turns her head and looks right at you. She gives you a dirty look when your eyes meet and you quickly close the door and leave.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 24:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bf_wm_vag1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on her side while a white guy lays on his side behind her with his dick in her pussy. They lay there as he fucks her pussy, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a black girl laying on her side while a white guy lays on his side behind her with his dick in her pussy. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 25:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bm_af_anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked Asian girl on her knees and elbows on the bed, while a black guy crotches above her, with his dick buried in her ass. As you watch he hammers her ass with his big black dick, her cries sounds like she is enjoying it, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked Asian girl on all fours on the bed as a black guy crouches above her with his dick buried in her ass. You watch as he hammers her ass, her cries sounding like she''s enjoying it. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 26:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bm_wf_anal1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked white girl laying on her stomach on the bed with her legs spread wide, a black guy kneels behind her with his dick buried deep in her ass. As he fucks her ass, she begs him to fuck her ass harder, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked white girl laying on her stomach on the bed with her legs spread wide as a black guy kneels behind her with his dick buried deep in her ass. As he fucks her ass, she begs him to fuck her ass harder. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 27:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bm_wf_bj1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A black guy is sitting on his bed naked, while a white girl kneels bent over next to him with his dick in her mouth. Her head bobs up and down as she sucks his cock, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. A black guy is sitting on his bed naked while a white girl kneels over next to him, her head bobbing up and down as she sucks his cock. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	elseif temp = 28:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bm_wf_cuni1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. A white girl is laying on the bed on her back with her legs spread wide, while a partially dressed black guy squats next to the bed with his face in her crotch licking her pussy, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. A white girl is laying on the bed on her back, her legs spread wide as a partially dressed black guy squats next to the bed with his face in her crotch licking her pussy. You quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'uni_dorm', 'eighth_floor'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/hallway/events/floor8/sex/bm_wf_vag1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You turn the handle and gentle push the door open a crack, just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked white girl on her elbow and knees on the bed, while a black guy kneels behind her fucking her from behind. She is crying out begging him to fuck her harder, after a few moments you close the door so you are not caught.'
+		'You turn the handle and gently push the door open just wide enough to look inside. You see a naked white girl on all fours on the bed as a black guy kneels behind her fucking her from behind. She''s crying out, begging him to fuck her harder, so you quickly close the door before you''re caught.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 1
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'