[text edits] Cleaned up and improved some text so they flow better.

locations/AlbStars.qsrc

@@ -468,13 +468,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore1':
 		tipdarand = rand(0, 2)
 
 		if tipdarand = 0:
-			'Without warning, he grabs your head and forces you down on his cock. You choke as his tip hits your throat.'
+			'Without warning, he grabs your hair in his fists and forces you down on his cock. You choke as his tip hits your throat.'
 
 			act 'Rough deepthroat':
 				cls
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/smroom/event/rought/oral1.mp4"></video></center>'
 				'The man begins to very roughly fuck your mouth, his tip continually slamming into your throat.'
-				'The man holds a tight grip on your head and you are forced to endure it. Drool is running from your mouth and tears run from your eyes as you gag on his cock.'
+				'He holds a tight grip on your head and you are forced to endure it. Drool is running from your mouth and tears run from your eyes as you gag and splutter on his cock.'
 				'Your distress doesn''t concern the man but appears to arouse him even further, which just makes him go even faster.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'deepthroat', 'rough'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -482,7 +482,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore1':
 				tipdarand = rand(0, 1)
 
 				if tipdarand = 0:
-					'Suddenly, the man grabs your hair and holds your head down.'
+					'Suddenly, he thrusts deeply into your mouth and holds you tightly down on his cock.'
 					'You let out a strangled gurgle as spurts of cum hit the back of your throat.'
 
 					act 'Swallow':
@@ -545,11 +545,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore1':
 				cls
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/shulginhome/smroom/event/rought/miss1.mp4"></video></center>'
 				'The man moves in, roughly flips you on your back and spreads your legs. "What a tight and inviting looking pussy you have." You feel the tip of his cock spread your labia apart as he pushes into you.'
-				'He grabs your throat and pins you to the bed as he starts to very roughly pound your pussy. He occasionally uses his other hand to tightly squeeze your nipple, making you squeal. He seems to enjoy treating you this roughly.'
+				'He grabs your throat and pins you to the bed as he starts to very roughly pound your pussy. He occasionally uses his other hand to tightly squeeze and twist your nipple, making you squeal. He seems to enjoy treating you this roughly.'
                 'You panic when he stops thrusting and tightens his grip around your neck. You thrash your arms and legs in distress, but he just smiles and doesn''t loosen his grip until you are close to blacking out. He then resumes fucking you, faster and seemingly closer to climax.'  
 				*nl
 				'You endure the remainder of the rough sex for what feels like an eternity, but he eventually lets go of you and pulls out. He starts jerking his cock and you feel his cum splattering onto your labia.'
-                'He is relieved to have pulled out. "Last time I was here, I came inside that cute little head dancer and her fath...I mean her boss, almost killed me! You sluts have a ''no pussy creampie'' policy it seems." he comments before climbing off of you.'
+                'He is relieved to have pulled out. "Last time I was here, I came inside that cute little head dancer and her fath... uh, I mean a <i>certain someone</i> almost killed me! You sluts have a ''no pussy creampie'' policy it seems. A shame really, your little pussy was just asking for me to cum inside it." he crudly remarks before climbing off of you.'
 				'To your despair and disgust, he then forces you into his now sweaty embrace, his flabby arm wrapped around your neck as he fondles your breast while bragging on his phone to his friend about "the fine little pussy" he just fucked. This post sex torture finally ends 10 minutes later.'				
 				gs 'pain', 2, 'throat', 'choke'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'rough'
@@ -583,7 +583,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore2':
 		guy += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/prostitute/bjd.jpg"></center>'
-		'The two men unbuckle their pants and pull their cocks out before one of them grabs you by the hair and pull you to your knees.' 
+		'The two men unbuckle their pants and pull their cocks out before one of them grabs you by the hair and pulls you to your knees.' 
 		'He maintains a tight grip on your hair as you lick, jerk, and suck the two cocks until they are both rock hard. You look up at the two men, seeking approval.'
 		'"Very good little lamb. Now take my cock. Take it all!" one of the men says.'
 		'The man grabs your head and forces his entire length into your mouth, causing you to choke. The two men laugh at you.'
@@ -729,8 +729,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
 		cls
 		guy += 2
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/prostitute/bjd.jpg"></center>'
-		'Kneeling in front of them, you unzip their pants and get their cocks out. You start licking their shafts and gently sucking their heads and they are both soon hard.'
-		'By the time you start sucking their cocks, their confidence has grown and they start pulling your hair to get you to suck them while making crude remarks about you.'
+		'Kneeling in front of them, you unzip their pants and get their cocks out. You start licking their shafts and gently sucking their heads and they are both soon hard. You hold in a giggle when you see that, even when hard, they''re both a little on the smaller side.'
+		'As you continue sucking their dicks, their confidence has grown and they start pulling you back and forth by your hair to get you to suck them while making crude remarks about you. You ignore their attempts at compensating for their lack of endowment, despite their roughness.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'dick', 'sub', 'group'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'dick1', 'sub', 'group'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -748,9 +748,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
 				cls
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/prostitute/threesome.jpg"></center>'
 				'You start sucking the cock in front of you while the other guy pushes into your ass.'
-				'His saliva provides little lube and sharp pain pulsates through your ass as he starts to fuck you. He also feeling emboldened and starts pulling your hair as well.'
-				'The guy behind you suddenly grabs you by the hips and starts pounding at your ass, forcing you forward and causing you to choke on the cock in your mouth. He grunts loudly and you feel the warmth of his cum spilling into your ass.'
-				'He pulls out and spreads your ass, making crude remarks about your "well fucked hole" as his load leaks from you. You let out a muffled yelp when he smacks your ass and you continue sucking the cock in your mouth.'
+				'His saliva provides little lube and sharp pain pulsates through your ass as he starts to fuck you, despite his smaller size. He is feeling emboldened and starts pulling your hair as well.'
+				'The guy behind you suddenly grabs you by the hips and starts pounding at your ass, forcing you forward onto the dick in your mouth. Its smaller size stops you from choking too much. He grunts loudly and you feel the warmth of his cum spilling into your ass. Unsurprisingly, his load is rather weak and small.'
+				'He pulls out and spreads your ass, making crude remarks about your "well fucked hole" as his small load leaks from you. You let out a muffled yelp when he smacks your ass and you continue sucking the cock in your mouth.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 30, 'dick1', 'sub', 'group'
 				gs 'pain', 1, 'throat', 'choke'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal', -1, 'dick', 'sub', 'group', 'humiliation'
@@ -760,11 +760,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
 				tipdarand = rand(0, 1)
 
 				if tipdarand = 0:
-					'The guy in your mouth then grabs your hair and starts roughly thrusting. You gag and let out a strangled gurgle as cum pours into your throat.'
+					'The guy in your mouth then grabs your hair and starts roughly thrusting. You gag and let out a strangled gurgle as a surprising amount of cum pours into your throat from his small dick.'
 					act 'Swallow it':
 						cls
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/mouth/cum1,4.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'Choking slightly, you frantically swallow it all down until he finishes.'
+						'Choking slightly, you swallow it all down until he finishes.'
 						'He pulls out of your mouth and you collapse on the bed, coughing and gasping for breath. The guys, very emboldened by the experience, laugh at you, calling you an "amazing little cum dumpster."'
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'dick1', 'sub', 'group', 'rough', 'humiliation'
 						gs 'pain', 1, 'throat', 'choke'
@@ -778,7 +778,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
 					act 'Facial':
 						cls
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/cumFace3.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'You close your eyes as the guy grunts and cum splatters across your face. It doesn''t stop until it''s dripping from your chin.'
+						'You close your eyes as he grunts and cum splatters across your face. It doesn''t stop until it''s dripping from your chin. You weren''t expecting such a huge load from a smaller cock.'
 						'You lie on the bed covered in cum and drool as the guys, very emboldened by the experience, make crude remarks about you being a "nasty little cum slut."'
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'dick1', 'sub', 'group', 'humiliation'
 						gs 'cum_call', 'face', $AlbinaQW['Cust1']
@@ -794,8 +794,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
 			act 'Part your lips':
 				cls
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/prostitute/threesome1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You take one cock into your mouth and start sucking while the other guy guides his cock into your pussy.'
-				'The guy starts fucking you while the guy in your mouth pushes deep and starts deepthroating you, causing you to loudly gag.'
+				'You take one cock into your mouth and start sucking while the other guy guides his cock into your pussy. His small size doesn''t fill you as much as you were expecting.'
+				'The guy starts fucking you while the one in your mouth pushes deep and tries deepthroating you, his tip barely reaching your throat.'
 				'The two of them fuck you like this for a good few minutes until the cock in your pussy is pulled out. "Fuck that rule man! This pussy is too good not to cum inside!" he moans as he walks around next to the other guy.' 
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 30, 'dick', 'sub', 'group'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', -1, 'dick1', 'sub', 'group'
@@ -804,15 +804,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
 				tipdarand = rand(0, 1)
 
 				if tipdarand = 0:
-					'The guy fucking your mouth ignores the complaint as he forces his entire length into your mouth and groans. You choke and gag as cum spills into your throat, but the guy keeps you pinned to the bed.'
+					'The guy fucking your mouth ignores the complaint as he pushes as far as he can into your mouth and groans. You choke in surprise at the amount of cum spilling into your throat from his small cock, but the guy keeps you pinned to the bed.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'dick', 'sub', 'group'
 					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', $AlbinaQW['Cust']
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Swallow it':
 						cls
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/mouth/Yum.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'You frantically swallow it down until he finishes.'
-						'He pulls out and you gasp for breath when the other guy tells you "Keep that mouth open!" You do as you''re told and he steps forwards and deposits his load into your mouth.'
+						'You swallow it down until he finishes.'
+						'He pulls out and you gasp for breath when the other guy tells you "Keep that mouth open!" You do as you''re told as he steps forward and deposits his load into your mouth.'
 						'You sit up and swallow the second load, showing the guys your empty mouth. Emboldened by the experience, they laugh at you and make crude remarks about you being a "a good little cocksucking cum whore."'
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'dick1', 'sub', 'group', 'humiliation'
 						gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', $AlbinaQW['Cust1']
@@ -821,15 +821,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore3':
 						act 'Call a taxi': gt 'AlbStars', 'cab_home'
 					end
 				elseif tipdarand = 1:
-					'The guy fucking your mouth ignores the complaint as he forces his entire length into your mouth before pulling out and jerking his cock while pointing it at your face.'
+					'The guy fucking your mouth ignores the complaint as he pulls out of your mouth and jerks his cock while pointing it at your face.'
                     'He groans and tells you to "Get ready to take it."'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 2, 'dick', 'sub', 'group'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Close your eyes':
 						cls
 						'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/facial/cumFace3.mp4"></video></center>'
-						'You close your eyes as cum splatters across your face. It doesn''t stop until you''re covered.'
-						'"Stay right there!" you hear the other guy say. Another load lands on your face and some of it gets in your hair too.'
+						'You close your eyes as cum splatters across your face. Despite his small length, he splatters a surprising amount of cum across your face.'
+						'"Stay right there!" you hear the other guy say. Another load, smaller than the first, lands on your face and some of it gets in your hair too.'
 						'You lie on the bed as the two guys, emboldened by the experience, make crude remarks to you about how your cum splattered face suits you.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 1, 'dick', 'sub', 'group', 'humiliation'
 						gs 'cum_call', 'face', $AlbinaQW['Cust']
@@ -863,7 +863,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'whore4':
 		cls
 		guy += 1
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/prostitute/blackbj.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'The man sits on a sofa and you kneel between his legs and unzip his pants. "Oh.My.God!" you exclaim as you pull his massive cock out. You compare the length and thickness of his shaft to your forearm.'
+		'The man sits on a sofa and you kneel between his legs and unzip his pants. "Oh.My.God!" you exclaim as you pull his massive cock out. You stare in bewilderment and compare the length and thickness of his shaft to your forearm.'
 		'"You like what you see baby? Go on." he chuckles.'
 		'Wide eyed, you wrap your hands around his shaft and slowly jerk it before taking it into your mouth. You suck and jerk the monster cock as the thought of it being inside you enters your mind.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub'

locations/albinahome.qsrc

@@ -57,7 +57,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/comfort.jpg"></center>'
 						'"Your own father sold your body to fund his election? That''s horrible!" you exclaim in shock.'
 						'Albina sits in silence before quietly nodding. "However, I wasn''t earning enough for him. That''s when he discovered my dance troupe and forced me to start selling my friends instead. I had to <<$pcs_nickname>>! I had to!" she tearfully exclaims.'
-						'"I was forced to let those fucking perverts do whatever they pleased with my friends <<$pcs_nickname>>! They were humiliated and abused for some fucking rubles! Rubles that the fucking bastard spent on his own whores that he mistreated instead of his campaign!"'
+						'"I was forced to let those fucking perverts do whatever they pleased with my friends <<$pcs_nickname>>! They were humiliated, abused and degraded for some fucking rubles! Rubles that the fucking bastard spent on his own whores that he mistreated instead of his campaign!"'
                         !! if virgin or not
 						if pcs_vag = 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0: 
 						'"That''s why I didn''t get you involved. Too many girls have to hide the fact that those bastards were their first time. I wasn''t going to let it happen again. But what he did to me..." Tears are streaming down her cheeks at this point.'
@@ -73,7 +73,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							'"What did he do?" you ask.'
 							'"It was bad enough being forced to whore out my friends to abusive creeps who almost choked them to death, but......but....."'
 							'"But what?" you ask softly. She steels herself before answering you. "If I didn''t get the girl the guys wanted, my father said it was perfectly fine for them to take me and do what they wanted, even rape me." she cries.'
-							'"They would take their anger at not getting the girl they wanted out on me. I would be choked, slapped, even spat on! Some nights, I''d come home and he would berate me for not ''helping his donors'' and I would be subjected to his abuse as well. Other times, he would bring his friends home and let them have their way with me. One guy or four, it didn''t matter to him so long as they paid.'
+							'"They would take their anger at not getting the girl they wanted out on me. I would be choked, slapped, even spat on! Some nights, I''d come home and he would berate me for not ''helping his donors'' and I would be subjected to his abuse as well. Other times, he would bring his friends home and let them have their way with me. One guy or four, he didn''t care what they done to me so long as they paid.'
 							'"My dad abusing me my entire life while running a prostitution ring where my friends were subjected to abusive sexual exploitation...and I...I couldn''t anything about it!" The words barely make it out of her mouth before she bursts into a flood of tears.'
 
 							act 'Comfort her':
@@ -81,10 +81,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 								minut += 15
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/kissingattempt.jpg"></center>'
-								'You cradle her head against your chest as she sobs away, her tears soaking into your top. "Hey, hey. But you did do something about it. You went to the police and now he''s going to prison!" you reassure her while softly stroking her hair.'
+								'You cradle her head against your chest as she sobs away, her tears soaking into your top. "Hey, hey. But you did do something about it. He''s going to prison for what he done!" you reassure her while softly stroking her hair.'
 								'She sits up, her eyes puffy from crying and wipes away her tears. "Yeah, yeah you''re right <<$pcs_nickname>>. I just got tired of watching my friends suffer when they didn''t deserve any of this. So I exposed him as what he is. A vile fucking creep!"'
-								'"I just wanted to live my life without fearing what my own father, or any other man for that matter, would do to me. For the longest time, I was just too fucking submissive." she says before looking intently into your eyes.'
-								'You smile at her and are about to reply when she closes her eyes and tilts her head towards you.'
+								'"I just wanted to live my life without fearing what my own father, or any other man for that matter, would do to me. For the longest time, I was just too fucking submissive. I done what I should have years ago. Got what I wanted, when I wanted." she says before looking intently into your eyes.'
+								'You smile at her and are about to reply when she suddenly leans in and tries to kiss you.'
 								gs 'willpower', 'cuni', 'resist', 'medium'
 								if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 									act 'Pull away (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -119,8 +119,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/kissing.jpg"></center>'
 										'As you continue kissing Albina, you feel her hand slowly working its way up your inner thigh.'
-										'Reaching your crotch, her hand slowly slides into your panties and starts gently fondling your clitoris.'
-										'You moan into her mouth. Someone must have shown her a few things on pleasing a girl.'
+										'Reaching your crotch, her hand slowly slides into your panties and starts gently fondling your clitoris, her fingers finding their way between your lips as well.'
+										'You moan into her mouth. She clearly knows more than a few things about pleasing a girl.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 2
 										gs 'arousal', 'massage', 2
 										minut -= 5
@@ -644,7 +644,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'albina_ass_fucks_you':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/game/anal2.jpg"></center>'
 		'Once you are comfortable with her in your ass, she stands up over you and starts getting harder and faster with the ass fucking she is giving you. When it starts getting a little too rough, she seems to notice and backs off just a little before getting into a nice rhythm of slamming the dildo in and out of your ass. She enjoys fucking you hard, growing more aroused over time.' 
-		'Just as it is starting to hurt, she stops and lets out a pleasured moan before pulling out of you. You feel a rush of cold air around your gaping asshole. "You were such a good little butt slut <<$pcs_nickname>>." she says. You turn and see her sliding the harness off, apparently finished with you. You notice the wet patch on the bed. She obviously greatly enjoyed hammering your ass.'
+		'Just as it is starting to hurt, she stops and lets out a pleasured moan before pulling out of you. You feel a rush of cold air around your gaping asshole. "You were such a good little butt slut <<$pcs_nickname>>." she says. You turn and see her sliding the harness off, apparently finished with you. You also notice the wet patch on the bed. She obviously greatly enjoyed hammering your ass.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 10, 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Finish': gt 'albinahome', 'strapon_finish'