Merge remote-tracking branch 'SpackledLanturn/minor-fixes'

locations/AnalPR.qsrc

@@ -13,7 +13,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 	gs 'arousal', 'auto_lube', 'anal'
 
 	if pcs_ass < dick:
-		$analsex = 'Your anus stretches painfully as he fills your ass with his meaty shaft. You wince and beg him to take it easy for a little while. Fortunately, he listens to your request. You feel your anus muscles relax which signals that he can go much faster. He goes slow at first then slowly gains momentum as he pushes closer to his orgasm.'
+		$analsex = 'Your anus stretches painfully as he fills your ass with his meaty shaft. You wince and beg him to take it easy for a little while. Fortunately, he listens to your request. You feel your anus muscles relax, which signals that he can go faster. Slowly at first, he gains momentum as he pushes closer to his orgasm.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'rough', 'sub', 'unknown', 'prostitution'
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -28,8 +28,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/anal/doggy/anal30.jpg"></center>'
 	'You immediately feel the man''s hands on your ass cheeks when you get on your hands and knees in the back seat. The man confidently guides his condom-covered cock to your sphincter and slowly thrusts all of his <<dick>> centimeters inside you.'
 	'<<$analsex>>'
-	'After a few minutes of fucking your ass, the man groans and you feel his hips spasming against your ass. He pulls out of you then takes the filled condom off his slowly shrinking cock.'
-	'The man ties a knot at the open end of the condom to carelessyly toss it out of the window.'
+	'After a few minutes of fucking your ass, the man groans, and you feel his hips spasming against your ass. He pulls out of you then takes the filled condom off his slowly shrinking cock.'
+	'The man ties a knot at the open end of the condom and carelessly tosses it out of the window.'
 	spafinloc = 3
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub', 'unknown', 'prostitution'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 	gs 'arousal', 'auto_lube', 'anal'
 
 	if pcs_ass < dick:
-		$analsex = 'You feel a sharp pain and wince when the man pushes the tip of his <<dick>> centimeter member past your sphincter. He continues to work most of his length inside you. Fortunately, he listens when you beg him to go slow.<br>The guy holds still for a moment so your ass can get used to how far it''s being stretched out. After a little while, you don''t think it''s going to get any better, so you tell the man he can start to fuck you with a forced, fake smile on your face.<br>He''s still careful at first, but soon forgets about your suffering and accelerates more and more. The man groans loudly while he hammers his cock inside your ass. He ignores your crying and mewling coming from underneath him.'
+		$analsex = 'You feel a sharp pain and wince when the man pushes the tip of his <<dick>> centimeter member past your sphincter. He continues to work most of his length inside you. Fortunately, he listens when you beg him to go slow.<br>The man holds still for a moment so your ass can get used to how far it''s being stretched out. After a little while, you don''t think it''s going to get any better, so you tell the man he can start to fuck you with a forced, fake smile on your face.<br>He''s still careful at first, but soon forgets about your suffering and accelerates more and more. The man groans loudly while he hammers his cock inside your ass. He ignores your crying and mewling coming from underneath him.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', -5, 'rough', 'sub', 'unknown', 'prostitution'
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -77,7 +77,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 			spafinloc = 4
 			gs 'cum_manage'
 
-			'Suddenly the man groans loudly and abruptly pulls his member out of your stretched anus. The sudden emptiness feels strange, but you smile seductively at the man as he jerks himself off over your ass cheeks. When he''s done covering your buttocks with his seed he lets out a satisfied sigh and gives you your money.'
+			'Suddenly the man groans loudly and abruptly pulls his member out of your stretched anus. The sudden emptiness feels strange, but you smile seductively at the man as he jerks himself off over your ass cheeks. When he''s done covering your buttocks with his seed, he lets out a satisfied sigh and gives you your money.'
 			
 			act 'Continue':gt $locSex, $metkaSex
 		elseif cumanalRand = 1:
@@ -90,8 +90,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '2':
 		elseif cumanalRand = 2:
 			spafinloc = 3
 			gs 'cum_manage'
-			'Suddenly the man groans loudly and he holds still with his cock deep inside you. He very slowly pulls out which results in a trickle of his sperm to slowly run out of your slightly gaping ass.'
-			'He admires his work for a moment before giving the money he owes you with a satisfied smile on his face.'
+			'Suddenly the man groans loudly and he holds still with his cock deep inside you. He very slowly pulls out, which results in a trickle of his sperm slowly running out of your slightly gaping ass.'
+			'He admires his work for a moment before giving you the money he owes you with a satisfied smile on his face.'
 			
 			act 'Continue':gt $locSex, $metkaSex
 		end
@@ -107,9 +107,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '3':
 	menu_off = 1
 	gs'stat'
 
-	'When the man stops you think it''s because he came, instead, you hear swearing.'
+	'When the man stops, at first you think it''s because he came, but then you hear swearing.'
 	'"What the fuck!? What kind of dirty whore are you? This is disgusting!" he yells.'
-	'When you turn around you see the problem. His dick is covered in shit! You should have really given yourself an enema first if you want to sell your ass like this...'
+	'When you turn around, you see the problem. His dick is covered in shit! You really should have given yourself an enema first before you sold your ass like this...'
 	'The man shouts angrily, "Get lost you whore... you''re lucky I''m letting you leave without beating you up! You can forget about your money!"'
 
 	act 'Leave quietly':gt $locSex, $metkaSex
@@ -127,11 +127,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '4':
 	gs'stat'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/bjr.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Hey, I did what you wanted! You owe m-," you begin to say, but he doesn''t let you finish. The man angrily punches you in the stomach which makes you double over in pain.'
+	'"Hey, I did what you wanted! You owe m-," you begin to say, but he doesn''t let you finish. The man angrily punches you in the stomach, which makes you double over in pain.'
 	'"Fine! You''ll get your money... but you will correct your mistake you whore," he snarls angrily.'
 	'He kneels down then thrusts his smelly cock all the way into your mouth. He says with a mean grin, "Start sucking slut. It''s not coming out until it''s completely clean!"'
-	'The taste and stench are terrible. You really have to fight the urge to not vomit. You barely manage partially because you''re afraid of what he would do otherwise...'
-	'A few minutes later, long after you licked and sucked his cock clean the man is still fucking your throat violently. He finally groans and cums inside your mouth.'
+	'The taste and stench are terrible. You really have to fight the urge to vomit. You barely manage, partially because you''re afraid of what he would do otherwise...'
+	'A few minutes later, long after you licked and sucked his cock clean, the man is still fucking your throat violently. He finally groans and cums inside your mouth.'
 	'He scoffs at you when he pulls away as you roll to your stomach and dry heave a few times. That was disgusting!'
 	'He carelessly throws the money he owes you onto the ground then drives off without saying another word.'
 	spafinloc = 12
@@ -167,10 +167,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '6':
 	gs'stat'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/sex/car/sexcar20.jpg"></center>'
-	'You lie down obediently while giving the man a humble look as he takes his place between your legs. He quickly put a condom on not taking any more chances with you. You still have that awful taste in your mouth, but do your best to focus on giving the man pleasure.'
-	'The man drives his cock deep inside you and begins to fuck your pussy using long, firm strokes. He groans every time his hips slap against your buttocks and the intensity with which he fucks you makes you cry out as well.'
-	'After a few minutes, the man groans and you feel his hips spasming against your body. He pulls out of you and takes the filled condom off his slowly shrinking cock.'
-	'While you lay on the grass recovering from all the things you just had to do to not lose your customer. He theatrically throws a number of bills onto your body one by one. He''s smiling again and is clearly in a good mood. He''s even added a little extra!'
+	'You lie down obediently while giving the man a humble look as he takes his place between your legs. He quickly puts a condom on, not taking any more chances with you. You still have that awful taste in your mouth, but do your best to focus on giving the man pleasure.'
+	'The man drives his cock deep inside you and begins to fuck your pussy using long, firm strokes. He groans every time his hips slap against your buttocks, and the intensity with which he fucks you makes you cry out as well.'
+	'After a few minutes, the man groans, and you feel his hips spasming against your body. He pulls out of you and takes the filled condom off his slowly shrinking cock.'
+	'While you lay on the grass recovering from all the things you just had to do to not lose your customer, he theatrically throws a number of bills onto your body one by one. He''s smiling again and is clearly in a good mood. He''s even added a little extra!'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub', 'humiliation', 'rough', 'unknown', 'prostitution'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'cum_manage'

locations/_clothing_name.qsrc

@@ -8,33 +8,33 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 	if ARGS[1] = 2:$RESULT = 'A black one-piece swimsuit with straps for support, cut so the fabric shows off nearly all of the thighs in a seductive manner.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 3:$RESULT = 'A two-piece black-and-red design showing off a little midriff, the bottom piece the size of a normal pair of panties.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 4:$RESULT = 'A one-piece bathing suit in complete black, with white lines going across and accentuating the wearer''s figure.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 5:$RESULT = 'A tribal designed two-piece in white and maroon,  with leather straps, the top half showing off a bit of chest.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 5:$RESULT = 'A tribal designed two-piece in white and maroon, with leather straps, the top half showing off a bit of chest.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 6:$RESULT = 'A tiny bikini in light orange and white, outlined with frilly fabric.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 7:$RESULT = 'A black one-piece with highlighted cups for extra support and more emphasis on the chest area.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 8:$RESULT = 'A small floral design bikini, with tiny straps that barely cover everything and show plenty of skin, perfect for a tan.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 9:$RESULT = 'A unique two-piece with a simple knot-top and a tiny miniskirt, all in red.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 10:$RESULT = 'A bikini in the color of the Russian flag, it has a deep v plunge, who says patriotism cannot be sexy?'
-	if ARGS[1] = 11:$RESULT = 'A classic two-piece bikini in pink white polka dots covering it.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 10:$RESULT = 'A bikini in the color of the Russian flag, it has a deep v plunge. Who says patriotism cannot be sexy?'
+	if ARGS[1] = 11:$RESULT = 'A classic two-piece bikini in pink, white polka dots covering it.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 12:$RESULT = 'A vibrant yellow bikini with a halter top design.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 13:$RESULT = 'A sexily-designed swimming suit with adjustments made to accent the backside of any girl.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 14:$RESULT = 'A fashionable one-piece connected on one side to show off a large swath of stomach.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 15:$RESULT = 'One-piece black swimsuit that looks like 2 pieces, the middle is crochet together, highly showy and not practical at all.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 16:$RESULT = 'One-piece swimsuit with boat-neck cut and paradise print, it is fashionable despite its rather conservative.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 17:$RESULT = 'A coffee coloured one-piece swimsuit'
-	if ARGS[1] = 18:$RESULT = 'One-piece ruffled swimsuit with a scoop cut in cream, it has some innocent appeal to them...'
-	if ARGS[1] = 19:$RESULT = 'one-piece swimsuit with tasselled halter neckline and lace up front in taupe, it''s stylish and fashionable.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 20:$RESULT = 'A white one-piece swimsuit, it has colorful side-stripes that gives a retro feel to it.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 15:$RESULT = 'A one-piece black swimsuit that looks like 2 pieces, the middle is crocheted together, highly showy and not practical at all.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 16:$RESULT = 'A one-piece swimsuit with boat-neck cut and paradise print, it is fashionable despite being rather conservative.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 17:$RESULT = 'A coffee coloured one-piece swimsuit.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 18:$RESULT = 'A one-piece ruffled swimsuit with a scoop cut in cream, it has some innocent appeal to it...'
+	if ARGS[1] = 19:$RESULT = 'A one-piece swimsuit with tasselled halter neckline and lace up front in taupe, it''s stylish and fashionable.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 20:$RESULT = 'A white one-piece swimsuit, it has colorful side-stripes that give a retro feel to it.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 21:$RESULT = 'A strapless monokini with side-strings in fuscia, it''s very flirty and conspicuous.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 22:$RESULT = 'A crepe coloured, crocheted one-piece swimsuit, its deep plunge shows off your body like you mean business!.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 23:$RESULT = 'A black monokini, it has a very fun and flirty design, it emphasizes your curves a deal.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 24:$RESULT = 'One-piece swimsuit in black, it has scoop neckline and thin shoulder straps to create a curve hugging silhouette.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 25:$RESULT = 'Backless one-piece swimsuit with a deep v plunge, eggplant in color, it''s both practical and fashionable.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 26:$RESULT = 'A chlorine-resistant, training swimsuit, high-leg-height and still manage to look somewhat fashionable!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 23:$RESULT = 'A black monokini with a very fun and flirty design, it emphasizes your curves a great deal.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 24:$RESULT = 'A one-piece swimsuit in black, it has a scoop neckline and thin shoulder straps to create a curve hugging silhouette.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 25:$RESULT = 'A backless one-piece swimsuit with a deep v plunge, eggplant in color, it''s both practical and fashionable.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 26:$RESULT = 'A chlorine-resistant, training swimsuit, while high-leg-height it still manages to look somewhat fashionable!'
 	if ARGS[1] = 27:$RESULT = 'A two-piece black leather design, the top made as a halter top with a mesh design.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 28:$RESULT = 'A navy one-piece swimsuit, it has a light and flirty plunge and looks pretty good despite its price tag.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 29:$RESULT = 'A white one-piece swimsuit, it has very simple design and practical. Solid white never goes out of style!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 30:$RESULT = 'A black monokini with deep v plunge, the hallow cuts help to emphasize your body, it''s a conspicuous swimsuit!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 31:$RESULT = 'A sporty and backless one-piece, with a high leg'
+	if ARGS[1] = 29:$RESULT = 'A white one-piece swimsuit, it has a very simple and practical design. Solid white never goes out of style!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 30:$RESULT = 'A black monokini with deep v plunge, the hallow cuts help to emphasize your body. It''s a conspicuous swimsuit!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 31:$RESULT = 'A sporty and backless one-piece, with a high leg.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 32:$RESULT = 'A bikini with string straps and using the minimum material to still pass as decent. Classic sexy in red.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 33:$RESULT = 'A posh and slutty one-piece, perfect for a trophy wife or mistress. Purple with gold beads'
 	if ARGS[1] = 34:$RESULT = 'A black, spidery waterproof one-piece forming a tight v shape showing off a lot of skin.'
@@ -42,20 +42,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 	if ARGS[1] = 36:$RESULT = 'A red bikini with small briefs and a boob tube style top. Attention grabbing without being indecent.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 37:$RESULT = 'A one-piece swimsuit in blue with white and pink stripes, it has a high neck and is designed for performance as much as looks.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 38:$RESULT = 'A floral design bikini with bows and ruffles just perfect for the beach but not so good for swimming in.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 39:$RESULT = 'A one-piece with so many cut-outs its could pass for a bikini, has a bit of a spider web vibe and might just be the perfect thing for a sexy Goth.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 39:$RESULT = 'A one-piece with so many cut-outs its could pass for a bikini, it has a bit of a spider web vibe and might just be the perfect thing for a sexy Goth.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 40:$RESULT = 'A leatherette bikini with scale detail to look like crocodile skin but in a glossy black. A little skimpy with string details.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 41:$RESULT = 'A fashionable one-piece swimsuit in Egyptian blue, it teases yet remain some what functional.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 42:$RESULT = 'A classic black bikini white trim and florescent yellow detail, very chic.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 41:$RESULT = 'A fashionable one-piece swimsuit in Egyptian blue, it teases yet remains somewhat functional.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 42:$RESULT = 'A classic black bikini with white trim and florescent yellow detail, very chic.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 43:$RESULT = 'A belted, one-piece, denim colored swimsuit, it looks pretty good despite its price tag.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 44:$RESULT = 'A modern black and white bikini with tie string briefs.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 45:$RESULT = 'A sleek white one-piece with blue go faster stripes.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 46:$RESULT = 'An one-piece swimsuit in light blue, it has a very simplistic, practical design.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 46:$RESULT = 'A one-piece swimsuit in light blue, it has a very simplistic, practical design.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 47:$RESULT = 'A modest one-piece swimsuit with white floral prints.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 48:$RESULT = 'An one-piece swimsuit in iris color, it has a plunge that shows off your cleavage quite nicely.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 49:$RESULT = 'A classy blue bikini with bling links. You''ll look a million rubles in this'
+	if ARGS[1] = 48:$RESULT = 'A one-piece swimsuit in iris color, it has a plunge that shows off your cleavage quite nicely.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 49:$RESULT = 'A classy blue bikini with bling links. You''ll look a million rubles in this.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 50:$RESULT = 'A floral bikini with a deep v neck top to show some cleavage but still conservative.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 51:$RESULT = 'A black one-piece with a patterned circular cut out over the stomach.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 52:$RESULT = 'An one-piece sporty swimsuit with boyleg-cut, unassuming and highly practical.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 52:$RESULT = 'A one-piece sporty swimsuit with boyleg-cut, unassuming and highly practical.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 53:$RESULT = 'A fresh black and pink pattern on white bikini make this fashionable and stylish choice.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 54:$RESULT = 'A peanut coloured one-piece swimsuit, it has a very simplistic, practical design.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 55:$RESULT = 'A bright patterned bikini with thin straps on a tube top.'
@@ -64,28 +64,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 	if ARGS[1] = 58:$RESULT = 'A patterned one-piece with a very low v cut neck-line.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 59:$RESULT = 'A magenta one-piece with a patterned cut out from the neck-line to the belly button.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 60:$RESULT = 'A red bikini with ruffles and tie string briefs.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 61:$RESULT = 'A black bikini with cross strap that resemble one-piece swimsuit, it''s more for show than being practical.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 61:$RESULT = 'A black bikini with cross strap that resembles a one-piece swimsuit, it''s more for show than being practical.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 62:$RESULT = 'A black one-piece with not too much breast coverage and string straps.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 63:$RESULT = 'A bikini made for a bimbo, pink with multi-coloured hearts, string ties and plastic hoops.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 64:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini with small gold circles on it and gold chain straps.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 65:$RESULT = 'A black bikini with a colourful trim. It balances exposure and dignity very well.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 66:$RESULT = 'A pink bikini with tie string briefs.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 67:$RESULT = 'A blue one-piece lacy swimsuit, it''s more for showy display than practical usage.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 68:$RESULT = 'One-piece swimsuit in black, it''s very simple except the modest spacing that tastefully shows your skin.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 68:$RESULT = 'A One-piece swimsuit in black, it''s very simple except for the modest spacing that tastefully shows your skin.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 69:$RESULT = 'A modest black-blue one-piece swimsuit, cut so the fabric shows off nearly all of the thighs in a seductive manner.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 70:$RESULT = 'A pink one-piece swimsuit, it shows modest amount of your cleavage.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 70:$RESULT = 'A pink one-piece swimsuit, it shows a modest amount of your cleavage.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 71:$RESULT = 'A black one-piece high cut swimsuit with an inviting deep plunge, the design is quite flirty .'
 	if ARGS[1] = 72:$RESULT = 'A one-piece, cold asymmetrical black swimsuit with cut on the strap side, it''s a rather showy swimsuit.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 73:$RESULT = 'A black one-piece swimsuit with jagged-cut and decorated with little gold tubes.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 74:$RESULT = 'An orange one-piece swimsuit, it has a plunge but still overs you very modestly.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 75:$RESULT = 'A blue one-piece swimsuit with a plunge, it shows decent amount of your cleavage.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 74:$RESULT = 'An orange one-piece swimsuit, it has a plunge but still covers you very modestly.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 75:$RESULT = 'A blue one-piece swimsuit with a plunge, it shows a decent amount of your cleavage.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 76:$RESULT = 'This bright pink bikini-monokini hybrid has two thin straps connecting the top and briefs and is held together by heart-shaped plastic hoops. Perfect for any bimbo.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 77:$RESULT = 'An orange-black patterned bikini, with tie string briefs.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 78:$RESULT = 'A classic, one-piece black swimsuit, it might not be flirty enough for some.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 79:$RESULT = 'A deep V one-piece black swimsuit with floral print, it shows and entices.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 80:$RESULT = 'A one-piece, cold asymmetrical black swimsuit with cut on the opposite side of the shoulder strap, it''s a rather showy swimsuit.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 81:$RESULT = 'A light blue bikini made for the exhibitionists out there. The fabric is quite revealing and doesn''t cover your private parts at all.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 82:$RESULT = 'One-piece, sporty swimsuit with two yellow stripes that emphasize your figure a little.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 82:$RESULT = 'A one-piece, sporty swimsuit with two yellow stripes that emphasize your figure a little.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 83:$RESULT = 'A classic, light-blue and white bikini with tie string briefs.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 84:$RESULT = 'A classic, red-white bikini, with light-blue strings and a tie string thong.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 85:$RESULT = 'An all black bikini.'
@@ -94,28 +94,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 	if ARGS[1] = 88:$RESULT = 'A classic patterned bikini, with thick black strings.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 89:$RESULT = 'A light pink bikini held together by metal rings.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 90:$RESULT = 'A bright-purple bikini with a tie string thong.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 91:$RESULT = 'A blue leaf-patterned swimsuits, cut so that the fabric shows off the thighs in a seductive manner.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 91:$RESULT = 'A blue leaf-patterned swimsuit, cut so that the fabric shows off the thighs in a seductive manner.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 92:$RESULT = 'A slutty black swimsuit with a very deep cleavage and black straps running over the hips.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 93:$RESULT = 'A mostly-pink two-piece swimsuit. While the briefs are comparable to those of a bikini, the top ends just above the belly button, is very modest and has long sleeves.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 94:$RESULT = 'A pale turquoise bikini with an almost tube top and tie string bottoms.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 95:$RESULT = 'A classic red and polka-dot-patterned bikini with tie string briefs.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 96:$RESULT = 'A classic blue bikini.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 97:$RESULT = 'A bright pink swimsuit, which does show some cleavage, if the wearers breasts are large enough.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 98:$RESULT = 'A classic black-white patterned bikini. Between the breasts there is a metal ring connecting holding together the top.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 99:$RESULT = 'A black swimsuit, which does show some cleavage if the wearers breasts are large enough.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 100:$RESULT = 'A white patterned swimsuit, which does show some cleavage if the wearers breasts are large enough.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 97:$RESULT = 'A bright pink swimsuit, which does show some cleavage if the wearer''s breasts are large enough.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 98:$RESULT = 'A classic black-white patterned bikini. Between the breasts there is a metal ring holding the top together.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 99:$RESULT = 'A black swimsuit, which does show some cleavage if the wearer''s breasts are large enough.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 100:$RESULT = 'A white patterned swimsuit, which does show some cleavage if the wearer''s breasts are large enough.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 101:$RESULT = 'A modest blue swimsuit, cut so it shows off the thighs in a seductive manner.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 102:$RESULT = 'A seductive black swimsuit, which shows off a lot of cleavage. Its bottom part is cut so, that it not only shows off the thighs, but also a good amount of the hips.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 103:$RESULT = 'A classic red bikini, with a tie string thong.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 104:$RESULT = 'A classic khaki bikini, with tie string briefs.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 105:$RESULT = 'A classic blue polka-dot patterned bikini, with a tie between the breasts and frilly briefs.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 106:$RESULT = 'A classic light-pink bikini, with tie pink briefs.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 107:$RESULT = 'A sexy light-pink and black one-piece swimsuit, showing off a good amount of cleavage. It lower part is held to gether by tie strings and the swimsuit does not cover the hips.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 107:$RESULT = 'A sexy light-pink and black one-piece swimsuit, showing off a good amount of cleavage. Its lower part is held together by tie strings and the swimsuit does not cover the hips.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 108:$RESULT = 'A well made choral and black tankini.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 109:$RESULT = 'A classic light-blue bikini.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 110:$RESULT = 'A basic white bikini.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 111:$RESULT = 'A strapless dark blue swimsuit, with white décor around the fabric covering the breast.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 112:$RESULT = 'This classic gold-black bikini is made from a shiny fabric, which briefs are held together by two metal rings.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 112:$RESULT = 'This classic gold-black bikini is made from a shiny fabric. Its briefs are held together by two metal rings.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 113:$RESULT = 'A classic black-white patterned bikini, with light green straps. Its thong is held together by tie strings.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 114:$RESULT = 'A blue and white striped swimsuit which looks a bit mumsy.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 115:$RESULT = 'A very thin white swimsuit which looks like it''ll go see through if wet, like on an Asian porn site.'
@@ -125,15 +125,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 	if ARGS[1] = 119:$RESULT = 'A classic blue bikini, with golden straps.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 120:$RESULT = 'A classic colourful bikini, with tie strapped briefs.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 121:$RESULT = 'A classic colourful bikini.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 122:$RESULT = 'This blue swimsuit got a copper-brown zipper in the front, making it possible to show off quite a cleavage. Additionally the swimsuit shows off the wearers hips, as the sides are open.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 122:$RESULT = 'This blue swimsuit has a copper-brown zipper in the front, making it possible to show off quite a bit of cleavage. Additionally the swimsuit shows off the wearers hips, as the sides are open.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 123:$RESULT = 'Black plastic rings hold together this classic all-black bikini.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 124:$RESULT = 'This bright pink bikini is perfect for any aspiring bimbo.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 125:$RESULT = 'A classic orange bikini.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 126:$RESULT = 'This dark-blue swimsuits bottom part is cut so, that is shows off the wearers thighs seductively. The fabric covering the breasts is decorated with a white pattern.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 126:$RESULT = 'This dark-blue swimsuits bottom part is cut so that it shows off the wearer''s thighs seductively. The fabric covering the breasts is decorated with a white pattern.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 127:$RESULT = 'A classic white bikini, with a tie stringed thong.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 128:$RESULT = 'A light-blue bikini.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 129:$RESULT = 'A classic yellow bikini.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 130:$RESULT = 'This sexy pink-black swimsuit shows off quite the cleavage with its zipper front and the wearers hips.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 130:$RESULT = 'This sexy pink-black swimsuit shows off the wearer''s hips and quite a bit of cleavage with its zipper front.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 131:$RESULT = 'This pink polka-dot patterned bikini is held together by tie straps and white plastic rings.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 132:$RESULT = 'A decent khaki swimsuit, which may show off some cleavage, but is overall rather conservative.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 133:$RESULT = 'A black-white patterned swimsuit.'
@@ -143,49 +143,49 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 	if ARGS[1] = 137:$RESULT = 'A green swimsuit with a pattern cut into the material.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 138:$RESULT = 'A near black swimsuit with mesh detail on the neckline and cut outs on the side to shape your figure.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 139:$RESULT = 'A blue and white tight line patterned bikini.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 140:$RESULT = 'A black swimsuit in leather look material with mesh sides.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 141:$RESULT = 'A very shiny azur swimsuit with high leg and high neckline.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 140:$RESULT = 'A black swimsuit in leather looking material with mesh sides.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 141:$RESULT = 'A very shiny azure swimsuit with high leg and high neckline.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 142:$RESULT = 'A dark green bikini with multiple string sides to the bottoms.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 143:$RESULT = 'A black swimsuit with high neckline and tight fit, made for speed.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 144:$RESULT = 'A blue and white hooped one piece, very nautical.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 145:$RESULT = 'A cyan, melon and fuschia tie string bikini.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 145:$RESULT = 'A cyan, melon and fuchsia tie string bikini.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 146:$RESULT = 'A blue and white short tankini with red detail on the bottoms.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 147:$RESULT = 'A designer bikini with halter top, does look a bit like underwear though.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 148:$RESULT = 'A tidy black bikini with cut out detail on the bottoms.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 149:$RESULT = 'A bikini set witth actual zebras printed on them, you feel both silly and cute in the same time.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 149:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with actual zebras printed on them, you feel both silly and cute at the same time.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 150:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set, it has a triangle top with a side-string bottom that offers full coverage.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 151:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and side-tie bottom in the color mineral alloy, it has crochet print.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 152:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in the color sangria, it has a tie-back top and a cheeky bottom, its both flirty and functional.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 153:$RESULT = 'A bikini in dark periwinkle, it has a triangle top with tie-back and a classic bikini bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 154:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a Brazillian bottom, its traditional Japanese art print makes look exotic.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 155:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a tie-back top and a Brazillian bottom, the strings draws attention to your breasts.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 156:$RESULT = 'A bikini set witth a bralette top and a cheeky Brazillian bottom, its blue but also can reverse to black bikini.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 157:$RESULT = 'A bikini set witth a twist Bandeau top and a string bikini bottom, it has decorative gold stripes.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 158:$RESULT = 'A bikini set witth a small triangle top and a g-string bottom that leave very little to the imagination.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 154:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a Brazilian bottom, its traditional Japanese art print makes look exotic.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 155:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a tie-back top and a Brazilian bottom, the strings draws attention to your breasts.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 156:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a bralette top and a cheeky Brazilian bottom, its blue if worn normally but black if worn reversed.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 157:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a twist Bandeau top and a string bikini bottom, it has decorative gold stripes.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 158:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a small triangle top and a g-string bottom that leaves very little to the imagination.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 160:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a triangle top and a little thong bottom that shows off your booty quite nicely.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 161:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in black, it has a cross-string top and a Brazillian bottom, it hug your curves quite nicely.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 162:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in purple, it has a v plunge bralette top and a thong bottom it shows your booty nicely.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 163:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in Azure, it has a Bandeau top and a string bikini bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 164:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in the color fuscia, it has a triangle top and a tiny thong bottom that provide little back coverage.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 165:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle tops and a thong bottom in color fuscia and floral prints.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 161:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in black, it has a cross-string top and a Brazilian bottom. It hugs your curves quite nicely.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 162:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in purple, it has a v plunge bralette top and a thong bottom. It shows your booty nicely.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 163:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in azure, it has a Bandeau top and a string bikini bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 164:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in the color fuchsia, it has a triangle top and a tiny thong bottom that provide little back coverage.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 165:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a thong bottom in color fuchsia with floral prints.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 166:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini set with a triangle top and a thong bottom, it has white floral print and looks fun and flirty.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 167:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a Brazillian bottom in Tiffany Blue, it''s both functional and fashionalbe.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 168:$RESULT = 'A red bikini set with a triangle top and a Brazillian bottom that gives plenty of coverage yet remaining flirty!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 169:$RESULT = 'A bikini set witth a triangle tie-back top and a Brazillian bottom in the color Taffy, it looks fun and flirty.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 170:$RESULT = 'A bikini set that has a rather revealing halter top anda  small string bottom in the color Thunder.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 167:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a Brazilian bottom in Tiffany Blue, it''s both functional and fashionable.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 168:$RESULT = 'A red bikini set with a triangle top and a Brazilian bottom that gives plenty of coverage yet remains flirty!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 169:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle tie-back top and a Brazilian bottom in the color Taffy, it looks fun and flirty.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 170:$RESULT = 'A bikini set that has a rather revealing halter top and a small string bottom in the color Thunder.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 171:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in the color scarlet, it has a triangle tie-back top and a side-string bottom, classy and flirty.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 172:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a bralette top and a full bottom, it has supportive-cup, highly comfortable yet remain classy.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 172:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a bralette top and a full bottom, it has supportive-cup, highly comfortable yet still classy.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 173:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a bralette top and a full bottom, it has the classy vibe to it.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 174:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in the Cerulean color, it has a classic bottom as well as a tie-back top that reveal part of the cleavage.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 175:$RESULT = 'A bikini in Sky blue color, it has a fashionable halter-top top and a classic bikini bottom.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 176:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a strapless Bandeau top and a Brazillian bottom, its fun and flirty.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 177:$RESULT = 'A bikini in the color Laure, it has a  front-tie top and a multi-string bikini bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 178:$RESULT = 'A Triangle grey bikini top with rings and a scrunch Brazillian bottom, its both fahionalbe and functional.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 179:$RESULT = 'A Triangle bikini top with a Brazillian bottom in multi-floral print.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 176:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a strapless Bandeau top and a Brazilian bottom, its fun and flirty.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 177:$RESULT = 'A bikini in the color Laure, it has a front-tie top and a multi-string bikini bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 178:$RESULT = 'A Triangle grey bikini top with rings and a scrunch Brazilian bottom, its both fashionable and functional.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 179:$RESULT = 'A Triangle bikini top with a Brazilian bottom in multi-floral print.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 180:$RESULT = 'A pink ruffled bikini with a triangle top and a thong bottom, its both playful and flirty'
 	if ARGS[1] = 181:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a triangle top and a g-string bottom.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 182:$RESULT = 'A red bikini set witth a triangle top and a sexy thong bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 183:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a g-string bottom, its design reveal much of your body.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 182:$RESULT = 'A red bikini set with a triangle top and a sexy thong bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 183:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a g-string bottom, its design reveals much of your body.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 184:$RESULT = 'A red bikini with a tie-back top and a cheeky bottom, its sassy with class.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 185:$RESULT = 'A black bikini with a a multi-colored top and a classic bikini bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 186:$RESULT = 'A red bikini top with a deep plunge that shows off your cleavage and a small classic bottom.' 
@@ -195,7 +195,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 	if ARGS[1] = 190:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini with a medium-size triangle top and a string bikini bottom that provides coverage.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 191:$RESULT = 'A green bikini with snake-skin print, with a triangle top and a classic g-string.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 192:$RESULT = 'A red bikini set with a deep-plunge top and a thong bottom, it has two Navy blue stripes.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 193:$RESULT = 'A white bikini with blue hen, it has a bralette top and a Brazillian bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 193:$RESULT = 'A white bikini with blue hen, it has a bralette top and a Brazilian bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 194:$RESULT = 'A black bikini with a tie-back triangle top and a classic bikini bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 195:$RESULT = 'A bikini with a tie-back triangle top and a side-tie classic bikini bottom, it has floral print.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 196:$RESULT = 'A two-piece swimsuit in Indian red, it has a wrap front-tie top and a classic full bottom.'
@@ -203,17 +203,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 	if ARGS[1] = 198:$RESULT = 'A red bikini with a triangle top and g-string bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 199:$RESULT = 'A coral bikini set with a fashionable small triangle top and a thong bottom.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 200:$RESULT = 'A red ruffled bikini with a small triangle top and a thong bikini bottom.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 201:$RESULT = 'A yellow bikini with white polka dots, it has small triangle top with a deep plunge and a side-string thong bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 201:$RESULT = 'A yellow bikini with white polka dots, it has a small triangle top with a deep plunge and a side-string thong bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 202:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini set with decorative black flourishing, it has a triangle top and a side-string bottom.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 203:$RESULT = 'A pink bikini set with white polka dots, it has a plunged triangle top and a side-tie bikini bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 204:$RESULT = 'A  micro monochrome stripes bikini with a bralette top and a thong bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 204:$RESULT = 'A micro monochrome stripes bikini with a bralette top and a thong bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 205:$RESULT = 'A coral bikini set with a deep-plunge bralette top and a thong bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 206:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in medium Pearwood color, it has a scoop plunge top and a classic full bikini bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 207:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with blush tone print, it has a bralette top and a classic full bikini bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 208:$RESULT = 'A bikini set witth a smocked triangle top and a cheeky bikini bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 208:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a smocked triangle top and a cheeky bikini bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 209:$RESULT = 'A string bikini set with red palette print, it has a small triangle top and a cheeky string bikini.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 210:$RESULT = 'A bikini in baby blue color, it has a wrap top and a classic bikini bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 211:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with floral print, it has a triangle top and a Brazillian bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 211:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with floral print, it has a triangle top and a Brazilian bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 212:$RESULT = 'A two-piece swimsuit in the color pine green, it has a full coverage top and a thong bikini bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 213:$RESULT = 'A two-piece swimsuit in the color black, it has a halter top with transparent mesh and a double-strap thong bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 214:$RESULT = 'A two-piece swimsuit that looks like one-piece. it has a tankini top and a classic full bikini bottom.' 
@@ -221,10 +221,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swimwear':
 
 elseif $ARGS[0] = 'beach':
 	if ARGS[1] = 1:$RESULT = 'A crimson bikini with white lace, the bottom is designed in a grid pattern to seductively show off your pubic area.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 2:$RESULT = 'A slutty bikini designed off of a sling bikini, connected with tiny pieces of fabric and covering only the minimal needed.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 2:$RESULT = 'A slutty bikini designed off of a sling bikini, connected with tiny pieces of fabric and covering only the minimum needed.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 3:$RESULT = 'A silver bikini bottom designed to highlight everything apart from the important thing.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 4:$RESULT = 'A tiny red and black bikini dotted with diamonds, made for the girl who loves to show off her body.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 5:$RESULT = 'Made for a whore, with tiny shiny red triangles of fabric covering the important parts.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 5:$RESULT = 'A bikini made for a whore, with tiny shiny red triangles of fabric covering the important parts.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 6:$RESULT = 'A black bikini bottom seductively connected by chains.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 7:$RESULT = 'A small white bikini bottom held by a knot.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 8:$RESULT = 'A tiny white bikini bottom held by a knot, with frilly designs on it.'
@@ -234,82 +234,82 @@ elseif $ARGS[0] = 'beach':
 	if ARGS[1] = 12:$RESULT = 'A slutty pink fishnet bikini outlined in black, the top designed as at tube top.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 13:$RESULT = 'A whorish two-piece that can barely be called clothes, with tiny little pink bows covering the nipples and a little triangle covering the entrance.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 14:$RESULT = 'A slutty striped bikini, switching in between cyan blue and a semi transparent mesh.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 15:$RESULT = 'A sexual bikini covering the made minimum assets in hot pink and neon black.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 15:$RESULT = 'A sexual bikini covering the minimum assets in hot pink and neon black.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 16:$RESULT = 'A bikini made for a whore, with a silver triangular design where the top of the triangle barely covers the nipple of the breast.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 17:$RESULT = 'A tiny pink bikini leaving little to the imagination.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 18:$RESULT = 'The kind of bikini you''d wear if you were about to jump out of a giant birthday cake.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 19:$RESULT = 'A sparking golden bikini, with silver straps. You will get noticed in this'
+	if ARGS[1] = 19:$RESULT = 'A sparking golden bikini, with silver straps. You will get noticed in this.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 20:$RESULT = 'A shiny red bikini with sparkling sliver straps, whorish and gaudy.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 21:$RESULT = 'The skimpiest sliver one-piece held together with transparent straps.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 22:$RESULT = 'A slutty pink one-piece with a very high leg and low neck-line.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 23:$RESULT = 'A bikini made for a whore, the pink fabric is so revealing it only serves to draw attention to completely exposed breasts and pussy.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 24:$RESULT = 'A pink bikini with bright coloured straps. Its fairly small and shows some side boob.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 23:$RESULT = 'A bikini made for a whore, the pink fabric is so revealing it only serves to draw attention to the wearer''s completely exposed breasts and pussy.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 24:$RESULT = 'A pink bikini with bright coloured straps. It''s fairly small and shows some side boob.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 25:$RESULT = 'A pink-black leopard-patterned bikini.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 26:$RESULT = 'A pink patterned bikini with white strings.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 27:$RESULT = 'A very daring light-blue bikini, which fabric is too thin or revealing to cover any private parts.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 27:$RESULT = 'A very daring light-blue bikini, which''s fabric is too thin and revealing to cover any private parts.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 28:$RESULT = 'This blue bikini is perfect for any slut and whore out there. Zippers are conveniently placed over the private parts to allow easy access.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 29:$RESULT = 'Made for all the unashamed whores out there, this bikini is nothing more than a few purple straps and doesn''t even try to cover the private parts.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 30:$RESULT = 'This slutty pink and black monokini just about covers your private parts.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 31:$RESULT = 'Made from a shiny blue material, this monokini barely covers your private parts. Somehow it''s always a tad too small, forcing the fabric, which should cover your vagina, between your labia.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 32:$RESULT = 'This slutty bikini is made from a few straps and barely covers your privates parts'
-	if ARGS[1] = 33:$RESULT = 'Made for all the beach sluts out there, this blue monokini is cross shaped and held together by collar.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 34:$RESULT = 'A bikini perfect for all the bimbo sluts that love pink bikinis, but don''t want to waste time when having sex by undressing. These pieces of clothes are nothing more than a few pink straps.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 35:$RESULT = 'What is this? Is this even a monokini? Who knows. It''s extremely slutty, doesn''t cover your breast at all and a white collar holds a very small blue vagina cover in place.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 36:$RESULT = 'A slutty, green-black patterned monokini, which top and bottom part are connected by very thin, black straps. '
+	if ARGS[1] = 33:$RESULT = 'Made for all the beach sluts out there, this blue monokini is cross shaped and held together by a collar.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 34:$RESULT = 'A bikini perfect for all the bimbo sluts that love pink bikinis, but don''t want to waste time undressing when having sex by. These pieces of clothes are nothing more than a few pink straps.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 35:$RESULT = 'What is this? Is this even a monokini? Who knows. It''s extremely slutty, doesn''t cover your breast at all and has only a very small blue vagina cover held in place by a white collar.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 36:$RESULT = 'A slutty, green-black patterned monokini, which''s top and bottom part are connected by very thin, black straps. '
 	if ARGS[1] = 37:$RESULT = 'A white bikini, with a halterless top.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 38:$RESULT = 'A black bikini, with a halterless top.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 39:$RESULT = 'Made for a whore, this black bikini is nothing more than a few pieces of fabric, that just cover up intimate areas. The straps are super thin and the thong is really small.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 39:$RESULT = 'Made for a whore, this black bikini is nothing more than a few pieces of fabric that just cover up intimate areas. The straps are super thin and the thong is really small.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 40:$RESULT = 'An orange bikini, with yellow straps and a tie strapped thong.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 41:$RESULT = 'Made from a shiny pink fabric, this daring bikini is perfect for any aspiring bimbo.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 42:$RESULT = 'A silver bikini made from a shiny material, has its thong held together by tie straps.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 43:$RESULT = 'While this may look like a classic pink bikini, with black frills covering the top, it''s much more indecent, as the thong is made from a very thing fabric and can be easily seen through.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 44:$RESULT = 'A blue swimsuit-bikini hybrid, with a very revealing cleavage and a mostly open midsection, showing of the wearers waist and hips. The top and bottom part are connected on the front with blue strap.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 42:$RESULT = 'A silver bikini made from a shiny material, it has its thong held together by tie straps.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 43:$RESULT = 'While this may look like a classic pink bikini, with black frills covering the top, it''s much more indecent, as the thong is made from a very thin fabric and is easily seen through.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 44:$RESULT = 'A blue swimsuit-bikini hybrid, with a very revealing cleavage and a mostly open midsection, showing off the wearers waist and hips. The top and bottom part are connected on the front with a blue strap.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 45:$RESULT = 'A pink string outline of a bikini that shows everything and is pretty much pointless.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 46:$RESULT = 'A very minimal black bikini that just about covers your dignity.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 47:$RESULT = 'A shiny gold swimsuit with zipper on the front so you can show off your cleavage.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 48:$RESULT = 'A skimpy black bikini with cleavage zip.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 49:$RESULT = 'Open-piece swimsuit that is actually just lacy & crochet lingerie that can be worn underwater, it shows off your body quite nicely.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 50:$RESULT = 'A high-neck monokini in midnight blue and it is connected tastefully by a strap. More for show, less for actual swimming.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 51:$RESULT = 'A pink cross-strap monokini, it is rather showy and highly impractical, might just be the perfect thing for you?'
+	if ARGS[1] = 49:$RESULT = 'A One-piece swimsuit that is actually just lacy & crochet lingerie that can be worn underwater, it shows off your body quite nicely.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 50:$RESULT = 'A high-neck monokini in midnight blue, it is connected tastefully by a strap. More for show, less for actual swimming.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 51:$RESULT = 'A pink cross-strap monokini, it is rather showy and highly impractical. Might just be the perfect thing for you?'
 	if ARGS[1] = 52:$RESULT = 'A gold bikini set with a tie-back top and a g-string bottom that showcases your physique.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 53:$RESULT = 'A wipe bikini set in white with a Brazillian bottom, its hallow cut shows off your cleavage quite enticingly.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 53:$RESULT = 'A wipe bikini set in white with a Brazilian bottom, its hallow cut shows off your cleavage quite enticingly.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 54:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in orange and yellow string, it has a triangle top and a little g-string bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 55:$RESULT = 'A rather cheap looking bikini in the color taffy, it has a thin triangle top and a thin thong bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 56:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a Brazillian bottom. It has camouflage print but with more sensual colors.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 56:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a triangle top and a Brazilian bottom. It has camouflage print but with more sensual colors.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 57:$RESULT = 'A violet bikini set with a small triangle top and a g-string bottom, any less coverage would be indecent!'
 	if ARGS[1] = 58:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a small triangle top and a small sexy g-string, any less coverage would be indecent!'
 	if ARGS[1] = 59:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a small triangle top and a small sexy g-string in Midnight Blue, any less coverage would be indecent!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 60:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set witth a triangle top and a string bikini bottom, black bikini never goes out of style!' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 61:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a medium triangle tops and a g-string bottom in camouflage colors, it has flirty and fun vibe.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 62:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in the color chocalate, it has a small triangle top and a small g-string.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 60:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a triangle top and a string bikini bottom, black bikinis never goes out of style!' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 61:$RESULT = 'A bikini set with a medium triangle top and a g-string bottom in camouflage colors, it has flirty and fun vibes.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 62:$RESULT = 'A bikini set in the color chocolate, it has a small triangle top and a small g-string.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 63:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with decorative gold stripes, it has a triangle top and a thong bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 64:$RESULT = 'A Mint bikini set witth a tie-back top and a g-string bottom, its classy.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 65:$RESULT = 'A gold bikini with a thin halter-top and a small Brazillian bottom.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 66:$RESULT = 'A gold bikini with a Bandeau top and a side-tie Brazillian bottom.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 64:$RESULT = 'A Mint bikini set with a tie-back top and a g-string bottom, it''s classy.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 65:$RESULT = 'A gold bikini with a thin halter-top and a small Brazilian bottom.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 66:$RESULT = 'A gold bikini with a Bandeau top and a side-tie Brazilian bottom.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 67:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini with a strapless Bandeau top and a side-string bikini bottom.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 68:$RESULT = 'A black bikini with a halter-top and a classic string bikini bottom.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 69:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini with a triangle top and a Brazillian bottom.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 70:$RESULT = 'A gold bikini with a deep plunge and a g-string bottom, it''s rahter risque.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 69:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini with a triangle top and a Brazilian bottom.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 70:$RESULT = 'A gold bikini with a deep plunge and a g-string bottom, it''s rather risqué.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 71:$RESULT = 'A black bikini with light-blue dot print, it has a small triangle top and a pair of little thong bikini bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 72:$RESULT = 'A red sequin two-piece, it has a tube strapless top and a side-tie bikini bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 73:$RESULT = 'A pink crocheted bikini with white under layer, it has a small triangle top and a Brazillian bottom.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 73:$RESULT = 'A pink crocheted bikini with white under layer, it has a small triangle top and a Brazilian bottom.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 74:$RESULT = 'A black bikini set with a small triangle top and a g-string bottom.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 75:$RESULT = 'A red ruffle two-piece swimsuit with a padded Bandeau top and a classic brief bottom.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 76:$RESULT = 'A micro-bikini set in Amethst, it has a tiny triangle top and a thong bottom that bearly covers anything.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 77:$RESULT = 'A micro-bikini set in black, it has a tiny triangle top and a thong bottom that bearly covers anything.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 78:$RESULT = 'A micro-bikini set in neon green, it has a tiny triangle top and a thong bottom that bearly covers anything.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 79:$RESULT = 'A red sequin micro-bikini that has a tiny triangle top and a thong bottom that bearly covers anything.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 80:$RESULT = 'A black bikini that has a tiny triangle top that bearly covers your nipples and a g-string that covers nothing!' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 81:$RESULT = 'A grey bikini with green hem that has a tiny triangle top that bearly covers your nipples and a g-string that covers almost nothing!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 82:$RESULT = 'A pink bikini set that has a tiny triangle top that bearly cover your nipples and a g-string that reveals everything!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 83:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini set that has a tiny triangle top that bearly cover your nipples and a g-string that only cover your pussy minimally!' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 84:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini set that has a tiny triangle top that bearly cover your nipples and a g-string that covers nothing!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 85:$RESULT = 'A bikini that has a top that consist of two stripes and a g-string thong that leave nothing to the imagination!' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 86:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and it screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 87:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and it screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 88:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and it screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 89:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and it screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!'
-	if ARGS[1] = 90:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and it screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 76:$RESULT = 'A micro-bikini set in Amethyst, it has a tiny triangle top and a thong bottom that barely covers anything.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 77:$RESULT = 'A micro-bikini set in black, it has a tiny triangle top and a thong bottom that barely covers anything.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 78:$RESULT = 'A micro-bikini set in neon green, it has a tiny triangle top and a thong bottom that barely covers anything.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 79:$RESULT = 'A red sequin micro-bikini that has a tiny triangle top and a thong bottom that barely covers anything.' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 80:$RESULT = 'A black bikini that has a tiny triangle top that barely covers your nipples and a g-string that covers nothing!' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 81:$RESULT = 'A grey bikini with green hem that has a tiny triangle top that barely covers your nipples and a g-string that covers almost nothing!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 82:$RESULT = 'A pink bikini set that has a tiny triangle top that barely cover your nipples and a g-string that reveals everything!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 83:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini set that has a tiny triangle top that barely cover your nipples and a g-string that only covers your pussy minimally!' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 84:$RESULT = 'A blue bikini set that has a tiny triangle top that barely cover your nipples and a g-string that covers nothing!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 85:$RESULT = 'A bikini that has a top that consist of two stripes and a g-string thong that leaves nothing to the imagination!' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 86:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 87:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 88:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 89:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!'
+	if ARGS[1] = 90:$RESULT = 'A bikini that covers nothing and screams for attention, only a horny-whorey whore would wear something like this!' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 91:$RESULT = 'A transparent white bikini that''s wholly see-through when wet, perfect for an attention-seeking slut.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 92:$RESULT = 'A transparent neon green bikini that''s wholly see-through when wet, perfect for an attention-seeking slut.' 
 	if ARGS[1] = 93:$RESULT = 'A transparent neon green bikini that''s wholly see-through when wet, perfect for an attention-seeking floozy.' 
@@ -320,9 +320,9 @@ elseif $ARGS[0] = 'beach':
 	if ARGS[1] = 98:$RESULT = 'A transparent white bikini that''s wholly see-through when wet, it is classy, in a bimbo kind of way.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 99:$RESULT = 'A transparent white bikini that''s totally see-through even when its dry, it is perfect for an attention-needing bimbette!'
 	if ARGS[1] = 100:$RESULT = 'A transparent white bikini that''s wholly see-through when wet, perfect for an attention-wanting floozy.' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 101:$RESULT = 'A monokini that almost covers nothing, its perfect to show off your body, if that is your thing...' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 102:$RESULT = 'A monokini that almost covers nothing, its perfect for an attention-seeking bimbette!' 
-	if ARGS[1] = 103:$RESULT = 'A monokini that covers nothing, it signals people that you are desparate for attention and will do anything for it!' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 101:$RESULT = 'A monokini that almost covers nothing, it''s perfect to show off your body, if that is your thing...' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 102:$RESULT = 'A monokini that almost covers nothing, it''s perfect for an attention-seeking bimbette!' 
+	if ARGS[1] = 103:$RESULT = 'A monokini that covers nothing, it signals people that you are desperate for attention and will do anything for it!' 
 
 elseif $ARGS[0] = 'coat':
 	if ARGS[1] = 1:$RESULT = 'A light jacket offering very little protection from the weather.'
@@ -344,7 +344,7 @@ elseif $ARGS[0] = 'coat':
 	if ARGS[1] = 17:$RESULT = 'A coat with Dalmatian lining (not real fur) offering moderate protection from the weather.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 18:$RESULT = 'A dark red steam-punk classic offering moderate protection from the weather.'
 	if ARGS[1] = 19:$RESULT = 'A bomber jacket offering moderate protection from the weather.'
-	if ARGS[1] = 20:$RESULT = 'A blue puffer jacket with high-neck, it offers moderate protection in the cold months.'
+	if ARGS[1] = 20:$RESULT = 'A blue puffer jacket with high-neck offering moderate protection in the cold months.'
 end
 
 --- $clothing_name ---------------------------------

locations/_stock_item_info.qsrc

@@ -8,17 +8,17 @@
 !medical item
 $item_info['prezikcount'] = '<center><b>Condoms</b></center><br>Condoms prevent the exchange of body fluids during sexual activity, thereby preventing infection and conception. Condoms cannot be used again.'
 $item_info['prezik'] = '<center><b>Condoms</b></center><br>Condoms prevent the exchange of body fluids during sexual activity, thereby preventing infection and conception. Condoms cannot be used again.'
-$item_info['pregtest'] = '<center><b>Pregnancy test</b></center><br>Pregnancy test is strip that you hold in the urine stream or dip into a sample of urine. An area on the end of the test strip changes color if hCG is present, meaning you are pregnant. The test strip can only be used once.'
+$item_info['pregtest'] = '<center><b>Pregnancy test</b></center><br>A pregnancy test is a strip that you hold in front of your urine stream or dip into a sample of urine. An area at the end of the test strip changes color if hCG is present, meaning you are pregnant. The test strip can only be used once.'
 $item_info['tabletki'] = '<center><b>Birth control pills</b></center><br>Combination pills contain synthetic forms of the hormones estrogen and progestin. Most pills in each cycle are active, which means they contain hormones. The remaining pills are inactive, which means they don’t contain hormones<br>Application: one pill a day.'
 $item_info['vitamin'] = '<center><b>Vitamin drinks</b></center><br>A complete multivitamin in a fun-to-chew gummy, specially formulated to provide nutritional support for growing teenage girls.<br>Application: one pill a day.'
 $item_info['lekarstvo'] = '<center><b>Antibiotics</b></center><br>Antibiotics specifically treat infections caused by bacteria, such as Staph., Strep., or E. Coli., and either kill the bacteria (bactericidal) or keep it from reproducing and growing (bacteriostatic)<br>Application: one tablet a day.'
 $item_info['mosolmaz'] = '<center><b>Healing Ointment</b></center><br>Protects and soothes cracked and chafed skin. This will cure your itchy vulva'
-$item_info['lipbalm'] = '<center><b>Lip balm</b></center><br>Balm moisturizes lips, leaves them super soft and adds a subtle shimmer that makes your lips more attractive. There is a side effects: irreversible increases lip when it uses for a long time.'
-$item_info['fatdel'] = '<center><b>Weight loss pill</b></center><br>This magic pill can increase fat burning and the effect lasts for X days from the date of application. Intensive physical exertion, such as running, significantly increases the effectiveness of this drug.'
+$item_info['lipbalm'] = '<center><b>Lip balm</b></center><br>Balm moisturizes lips, leaves them super soft and adds a subtle shimmer that makes your lips more attractive. There is a side effect: irreversible increased lip size when used for a long time.'
+$item_info['fatdel'] = '<center><b>Weight loss pill</b></center><br>This magic pill can increase fat burning, and the effect lasts for X days from the date of application. Intensive physical exertion, such as running, significantly increases the effectiveness of this drug.'
 $item_info['klisma'] = '<center><b>Enema kit</b></center><br>A medical tool for cleaning and rinsing the rectum.'
-$item_info['lubri'] = '<center><b>Lubricant</b></center><br>A specialized gel used during sex and masturbation to reduce friction to or between the penis and vagina, anus, other body parts, or applied to sex toys to reduce friction or to ease penetration.'
+$item_info['lubri'] = '<center><b>Lubricant</b></center><br>A specialized gel used during sex and masturbation to ease penetration or reduce friction to or between the penis or sex toy and the vagina, anus, or other body parts.'
 $item_info['painkiller'] = '<center><b>Painkillers</b></center><br>A pack of pills containing drugs used to relieve pain. Some are taken recreationally for their mind-altering effects. Can be addictive.'
-$item_info['tampon'] = '<center><b>Tampons</b></center><br>A pack of cylinder-shape cotton swabs with a string that is capable absorb menstrual fluids during your period.'
+$item_info['tampon'] = '<center><b>Tampons</b></center><br>A pack of cylinder-shape cotton swabs with a string that is capable of absorbing menstrual fluids during your period.'
 $item_info['sanpad'] = '<center><b>Sanitary napkins</b></center><br>A pack of absorbent towels that provide protection during your period. They attach to the inside of panties to avoid any leakage onto your clothes'
 $item_info['breastpump'] = '<center><b>Breast Pump</b></center><br>A breast pump is a mechanical device that lactating women use to extract milk from their breasts. This is a manual model and comes with one bottle.'
 $item_info['bpbottles'] = '<center><b>Breastmilk Bottle S</b></center><br>Used to collect breast milk with a breast pump. This set contains three 150ml bottles.'
@@ -35,9 +35,9 @@ $item_info['bottle'] = '<center><b>Bottle of water</b></center><br>A cheap and c
 $item_info['buterbrod'] = '<center><b>Sandwich</b></center><br>A single serving deli-style sandwich to satisfy hunger for the moment.'
 $item_info['wine'] = '<center><b>Cheap Bottle of wine</b></center><br>It tastes kind of bad, but it is cheap and gets the job of getting drunk done if you drink enough of it.'
 $item_info['fashmag'] = '<center><b>Fashion magazine</b></center><br>Aimed at young women and teenage girls, the pages are filled with images of beautiful people and detail the latest trends in makeup, hair and fashion from all over the world!'
-$item_info['compmag'] = '<center><b>Computer magazine</b></center><br>While most of the articles contain interesting and helpful info regarding computers and other tech, there is still advertisements slipped in trying to sell you on some pricey equipment you &quot;absolutely need to buy&quot;.'
+$item_info['compmag'] = '<center><b>Computer magazine</b></center><br>While most of the articles contain interesting and helpful info regarding computers and other tech, there are still advertisements slipped in trying to sell you on some pricey equipment you &quot;absolutely need to buy&quot;.'
 $item_info['biomag'] = '<center><b>Biographical magazine</b></center><br>An educational magazine that explores the lives and minds of various leaders, artists, educators, innovators, and entrepreneurs from all over the world.'
-$item_info['cookmag'] = '<center><b>Cooking magazine</b></center><br>Whether your food is always turning out burnt or you know your way around a kitchen, this magazine is perfect for everyone! Inside are tons of tips and tricks along with various recipes ranging from quick 5 Minute dishes to baking some yummy desserts!'
+$item_info['cookmag'] = '<center><b>Cooking magazine</b></center><br>Whether your food is always turning out burnt or you know your way around a kitchen, this magazine is perfect for everyone! Inside are tons of tips and tricks along with various recipes ranging from quick 5 Minute dishes to some yummy desserts you can bake!'
 $item_info['knitmag'] = '<center><b>Knitting magazine</b></center><br>For those that are creative, this magazine offers in-depth guides ranging from super simple to challenging, with varying styles of traditional to cutting edge modern designs.'
 $item_info['compact_mirror'] = '<center><b>Compact Mirror</b></center><br>A small compact that can be carried in your purse. It has a small mirror that can be used to apply a light layer of makeup on a bare face, or fix any smeared makeup. It also has a tiny comb on the bottom half that can be unfolded and used to style your hair.'
 if $item_info[$ARGS[0]]!'':

locations/abduction.qsrc

@@ -9,7 +9,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	menu_off = 1
 	i = rand(1, 2)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/girltocar<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'Suddenly you hear someone come up from behind and you feel something hit your head.  Your vision goes black...'
+	'Suddenly you hear someone come up from behind, and you feel something hit your head.  Your vision goes black...'
 	act 'Pass out':gt 'abduction', 'abdCarTrunk'
 end
 
@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCarTrunk':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/trunkint1.jpg"></center>'
 	'You wake up in a very tight, dark place. You can feel that it is probably a car and you are most likely in the trunk.'
-	'You try to kick the walls with your feet, but after while you can see it''s pointless.'
+	'You try to kick the walls with your feet, but after a while you can see it''s pointless.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoomFirstEntry'
 end
 
@@ -35,11 +35,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRoomFirstChaining':
 	i = rand(1, 5)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/shackled<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
 	'You''re thrown onto a dirty bed. The man forcibly removes your clothes and puts wrist and ankle shackles on you. He slaps a collar around your neck then leashes you to the wall.'
-	'"You must have really have pissed someone off girl," he says.'
-	'"What is this place? What are you going to do to me," you ask.'
+	'"You must have really pissed someone off girl," he says.'
+	'"What is this place? What are you going to do to me?" you ask.'
 	'"This is where girls are brought to be trained as sex slaves!"'
 	'"... but... how... no..."'
-	'"Shut up slut. Usually, we torture you for fun and for as long as we want. When you''ve become broken enough then we sell you to the highest bidder."'
+	'"Shut up slut. Usually, we torture you for fun and for as long as we want. When you''ve become broken enough, then we sell you to the highest bidder."'
 	'"You cannot do this to me! It''s illegal!'
 	'"Ha! Who do you think are our best customers? They are politicians, police officers, businessmen... We have our cover, so you should shut up and get used to it!"'
 	'The man leaves without saying another word as you tearfully sob and yell for him to come back...'
@@ -88,7 +88,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRoom':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/basement1.jpg"></center>'
 	'You are in a dark basement that has only one window and some lights. A chain holds you to the wall and is connected to your collar.'
-	'You can only move few meters from the wall to reach several things left for you by your abductors.'
+	'You can only move a few meters from the wall to reach several things left for you by your abductors.'
 
 	act 'Look around':gt 'abduction', 'abdFood'
 
@@ -113,7 +113,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSomeoneComing':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/shave1.jpg"></center>'
 		'You are forced to shave yourself.'
 		'Obviously, your captors do not fancy women with body hair.'
-		'You are being watched the whole time, so you, probably, don''t cut your arteries or something similar.'
+		'You are watched the whole time, probably so you don''t cut your arteries or something similar.'
 		pcs_pubes = 0
 		pcs_leghair = 0
 		pcs_horny += 5
@@ -122,14 +122,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSomeoneComing':
 	if broken = 0 and rapeCount = 0 and tortureCount = 0 and examed = 0:
 		*nl
 		'The man comes up to you. He grabs your leash and forcibly puts a blindfold on your head to cover your eyes.'
-		'He leads you up the stairs as you feel a breath of fresh air that sensually careeses your bare skin.'
+		'He leads you up the stairs as you feel a breath of fresh air that sensually caresses your bare skin.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExamStart'
 	else
 		if broken = 0:
 			'Your body starts to tremble in fear of what is going to happen next.'
-			act 'Cover in panic on your bed':gt 'abduction', 'abdRape'
+			act 'Cower in fear on your bed':gt 'abduction', 'abdRape'
 			
-			if rapeCount >= 5: act 'Plead that you cannot bear anymore rough treatment':gt 'abduction', 'abdBreak1'
+			if rapeCount >= 5: act 'Plead that you cannot bear any more rough treatment':gt 'abduction', 'abdBreak1'
 		else
 		
 		end
@@ -195,11 +195,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExamResist':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/examslap.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Due to being scared of what they''ll do you start yelling and shaking to get loose of the leash.'
-	'Your captor is very strong, on top of your leash and cuffs that makes your attempt to escape futile.'
-	'He grabs you by the leash which knocks you down to the ground. He slaps your face hard and leaves it stinging with a red hand mark across the cheek.'
+	'Due to being scared of what they''ll do, you start yelling and shaking to get loose of the leash.'
+	'Your captor is very strong, on top of your leash and cuffs that make your attempt to escape futile.'
+	'He grabs you by the leash, which knocks you down to the ground. He slaps your face hard and leaves it stinging with a red hand mark across the cheek.'
 	'"You''re only making it harder bitch."'
-	'With these words he picks you up like you weigh nothing and slams you into the chair then restrains you.'
+	'With these words, he picks you up like you weigh nothing and slams you into the chair then restrains you.'
 	'He, calmly, sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExam1'
 end
@@ -209,8 +209,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExamObey':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/examsit.jpg"></center>'
 	'Willingly, like the slave you obviously have just become, you climb up onto the chair and sit there. You wonder what perverse things that are going to happen to you.'
-	'The man ties you up anyway, probably, to make sure you don''t try to escape after they start. This makes you even more nervous.'
-	'He, calmly, sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
+	'The man ties you up anyway, probably to make sure you don''t try to escape after they start. This makes you even more nervous.'
+	'He calmly sits down in a chair over in the far corner of the room.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdExam1'
 end
 
@@ -218,7 +218,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExam1':
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/exam1.jpg"></center>'
-	'A man dressed like a doctor, wearing a lab coat and suit with stethoscope around his neck. He walks, as if he''s unconcerned about you, through the door.'
+	'A man enters the room dressed like a doctor, wearing a lab coat and suit with stethoscope around his neck. He walks, as if he''s unconcerned about you.'
 	'Obviously, He doesn''t speak to you, but rather to the man sitting in the chair. The doctor says, "Wow, a nice catch indeed."'
 	'The doctor puts on a pair of rubber gloves then sits down on a small chair in front of you. He looks at your spread legs and what''s between them.'
 	*nl
@@ -235,7 +235,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdExam1':
 	'He pulls his finger out of your ass and finally reaches for your pussy.'
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
 		'"Oh, you''ll like this, her pussy is a virgin one."'
-		'"Looks like we hit the jackpot once again dear Doctor," says the man with happy smile.'
+		'"Looks like we hit the jackpot once again dear Doctor," says the man with a happy smile.'
 	else
 		'"And her pussy is <<$vaginatipe>>.'
 	end
@@ -267,13 +267,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenGiveTools':
 	'Your master approaches you. It looks like he is holding something big in his hands.'
 	'When he steps into the light, you can see he holds some very large dildos.'
 	'"Hello, my newly broken slave. I have a gift for you," he says.'
-	'You are rather quiet, because the fearful thoughts of having these dreadfully big dildos shoved anywhere into your body makes you puke.'
+	'You are rather quiet, because fearful thoughts of having these dreadfully big dildos shoved anywhere into your body make you feel like you might puke.'
 	'"Aren''t you glad whore? These dildos are here for you to train on, so you can perform better later in a "live" situation."'
 	'"Uhmm... thank you Master."'
-	'He them down next to your bed and leaves without saying another word.'
+	'He puts them down next to your bed and leaves without saying another word.'
 	if lactation['active'] > 0:
 		if breastpump = 0:breastpump = 1
-		'In the bottom of the box, under the various dildos, you also found a working breast pump.'
+		'In the bottom of the box, under the various dildos, you also find a working breast pump.'
 		if lact_engorgement > 3:
 		 'You are relieved that you can now empty your painfully full breasts'
 		end
@@ -291,7 +291,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak1':
 	'"You don''t understand bitch. You will leave this place in the end. As a broken sex slave or as a corpse."'
 	'"But..."'
 	'"You will be sold to someone as their slave. If you won''t accept that role you will be utilized for the more perverted needs of our customers. Those girls usually don''t survive for long.'
-	'A slight sense of dread washes over you as your mind races to think of what the horrors might await you.'
+	'A sense of dread washes over you as your mind races to think of what horrors might await you.'
 	'"Now, show me what a good sex slave you are."'
 
 	tortureType = rand(1,3)
@@ -367,8 +367,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBrokenGivePainkillerNo':
 	'Your master takes a clamp and pulls your tongue out. It tightly and painfully squeezes it.'
 	'He then secures the pill on top of a dildo and pushes the tip down your throat.'
 	'Your gag reflex activates, but he doesn''t remove the dildo for as long as you try to throw up.'
-	'You almost pass out. Everything goes dark and at that moment he removes it.'
-	'You have been forced to swallow the pill... but master looks still very angry.'
+	'You almost pass out. Everything goes dark, and at that moment he removes it.'
+	'You have been forced to swallow the pill... but master still looks very angry.'
 	pain['killer'] += 1
 	broken -= 5
 	pain['tongue'] += 5
@@ -401,7 +401,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckA1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokena1.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your tormentor unchains you and throws you onto your dirty bed.'
 	'Spreading your legs wide apart you spit on your hand and smear it on your pussy saying, "Come, take me, Master."'
-	'"I like my bitches restrained," your master says and ties your hands and feet together. Thus, it secures your position.'
+	'"I like my bitches restrained," your master says and ties your hands and feet together, securing your position.'
 	'His dick penetrates your pussy easily with the saliva doing its job.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 15, 'sub', 'bound'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -416,7 +416,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckA2':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/brokena2.jpg"></center>'
 	'Fucking you wildly for some time your master stops right before he orgasms.'
 	'He unties your hands and legs. He then ties your hands behind your back.'
-	'Knowing what he expects you to do you open your mouth wide and await his cock.'
+	'Knowing what he expects you to do, you open your mouth wide and await his cock.'
 	'After some mouthfucking and gagging he cums in your mouth.'
 	if broken = 1:
 		*nl
@@ -438,7 +438,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckB1':
 	'Your master unchains you and leads you to a device.'
 	'You can see that it''s meant to restrain a person in a laying down position with their head at the same height as someone''s crotch.'
 	'You want to please your master, so you lie down on it straight away. You dutifully await the attaching of the restraints.'
-	'After your master ties you, he walks up to your head. Your already open mouth is then roughly fucked by his member.'
+	'After your master ties you up, he walks up to your head. Your already open mouth is then roughly fucked by his member.'
 	'When he''s about to cum, he pulls his dick out and points it towards your face. You welcome the flying sperm with open eyes and mouth with your tongue out.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'rough'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -456,7 +456,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdBreak2FuckB2':
 	'Fucking you furiously for some time your master cums deep inside you.'
 	if broken = 1:
 		*nl
-		'"Very good, slave. You are on the path to redeem yourself," With these words he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location. He then leaves your room with the door closing behind him.'
+		'"Very good, slave. You are on the path to redeem yourself." With these words, he releases your arms to secure you back in your usual location. He then leaves your room with the door closing behind him.'
 	end
 	broken += 1
 	gs 'cum_call', 'anus', 'Master'
@@ -482,7 +482,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscape':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/cellarwindow1.jpg"></center>'
 	'You are looking at the only window in the whole basement.'
-	'However, there is a lock on it to prevent your escape though.'
+	'However, there is a lock on it to prevent your escape.'
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Try to break the lock':gt 'abduction', 'abdEscapeWindow1'
@@ -522,8 +522,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdEscapeWindow2':
 		failedEscapeCount += 1
 		act 'Panic':gt 'abduction', 'abdTorture'
 	else
-		'You did it! Just in time! Before someone managed to discover your actions you manage to loosen the window and pull yourself through it.'
-		'As you land you see some clothes hanging on a line. It looks like the clothes for 4 or 5 girls, but by luck one of the outfits is yours!'
+		'You did it! Just in time! Before someone managed to discover your actions, you manage to loosen the window and pull yourself through it.'
+		'As you land, you see some clothes hanging on a line. It looks like the clothes for 4 or 5 girls, but by luck one of the outfits is yours!'
 		act 'Run away':gt 'abduction', 'abdEscapeWindow3'
 	end
 end
@@ -585,7 +585,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFood':
 	'There''s enough space to do some basic <a href="exec:gt ''abduction'', ''abdexercise''">exercise</a>.'
 	chainChance = rand(1,100)
 	if chainChance <= 20 and (rapeCount > 5 or tortureCount > 5):
-		'Suddenly you spot a loose link on your leash chain. You try to manipulate it and you manage to free yourself from the wall.'
+		'Suddenly you spot a loose link on your leash chain. You try to manipulate it, and you manage to free yourself from the wall.'
 		'<a href="exec:gt ''abduction'', ''abdEscape''">Go to the window</a>'
 	end
 	act 'Eat dried food (0:10)':
@@ -607,7 +607,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFood':
 		gs 'cum_cleanup'
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/driedbread1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You ate the dried meat and bread. It causes your throat to become dry, so some water could come in handy.'
+		'You eat the dried meat and bread. It causes your throat to become dry, so some water could come in handy.'
 
 		act 'Get back':gt 'abduction', 'abdFood'
 	end
@@ -673,7 +673,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFood':
 		dynamic $showerdin
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/shower1.jpg"></center>'
-		'The shower is cold and you don''t have any shampoo, but at least you got clean again...'
+		'The shower is cold and you don''t have any shampoo, but at least you get clean again...'
 		if deodorant_on = 1: gs 'sweat', 'remove_deo' & '<br>Your deodorant gets washed away in the shower.'
 		act 'Get back':gt 'abduction', 'abdFood'
 	end
@@ -733,8 +733,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		else
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/mouthgagblow1.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
-		'Your hands are tied. A metal ring, fastened by a leather gag, is inside your mouth that keeps it pried open.'
-		'You have to endure a very rough mouth fuck. He knows no limits and gags you as he much as wants. He does let you breathe from time to time, but for most of the experience you feel like passing out. Your saliva is all over his dick while dripping onto your tits and stomach.'
+		'Your hands are tied. A metal ring, fastened by a leather gag, is inside your mouth, keeping it pried open.'
+		'You have to endure a very rough mouth fuck. He knows no limits and gags you as much as he wants. He does let you breathe from time to time, but for most of the experience you feel like passing out. Your saliva is all over his dick and drips onto your tits and stomach.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
 
@@ -744,7 +744,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		gs 'cum_call', '', 'Master', 0
 		i = rand(1,5)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/fucktiedpussy<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'Your hands are tied and you''re bent over the bed.'
+		'Your hands are tied, and you''re bent over the bed.'
 		'The guy starts to penetrate your pussy without warning. A sharp pain goes through your abdomen because your pussy is not wet enough to receive a dick.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -759,7 +759,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		else
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/fucktiedanal1.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
-		'Your hands are tied and you''re bent over the bed.'
+		'Your hands are tied, and you''re bent over the bed.'
 		'The guy starts to penetrate your ass without warning. A sharp pain goes through your anus as your ass is neither relaxed nor wet enough to receive a dick.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -771,8 +771,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/fistanal'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
 		'Your hands and feet are tied with your ass being high above your head.'
 		'This is because you are hanging upside down.'
-		'The guy starts pushing his thick fist to be inside your anus. At least he used a bit of lubricant...'
-		'When your sphincter fails to resist anymore you can hear a loud pop as his fist quickly penetrates your insides.'
+		'The guy starts trying to push his thick fist inside your anus. At least he used a bit of lubricant...'
+		'When your sphincter fails to resist anymore, you hear a loud pop as his fist quickly penetrates your insides.'
 		'He doesn''t stop there and pushes his hand deep. You can feel your intestines expanding as he opens his fist inside you.'
 		'The pain is unbearable, but he doesn''t care.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_fist', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
@@ -784,9 +784,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		pain['cervix'] += 10
 		pcs_vag += 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/fistvaginal'+rand(1,5)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'Your hands and feet are tied with your ass is raised higher than your head.'
-		'The guy starts pushing his thick fist inside your pussy. At least he used a bit of lubricant...'
-		'He pushes his hand deep inside your pussy. Suddenly, you can feel his fingers touch your cervix. He''s doing it on purpose!'
+		'Your hands and feet are tied with your ass raised higher than your head.'
+		'The guy starts pushing his thick fist deep inside your pussy. At least he used a bit of lubricant...'
+		'Suddenly, you feel his fingers touch your cervix. He''s doing it on purpose!'
 		'He''s pinching and pressing your cervix. You cry out loudly and try to shake him off, but you are bound. There''s no hope of success...'
 		'"What? Bitch, do you like it? I see that you do?" He stops pushing, but you can feel a finger brushing up against the cervix. "Should we penetrate another hole girl?"'
 		'"No, please... stop... just stop..."'
@@ -806,8 +806,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdRape':
 		else
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/mouthgagblow1.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
-		'Your hands are tied. A metal ring, fastened by a leather gag, is inside your mouth that keeps it pried open.'
-		'You have to endure a very rough mouth fuck. He knows no limits and gags you as he much as wants. He does let you breathe from time to time, but for most of the experience you feel like passing out. Your saliva is all over his dick while dripping onto your tits and stomach.'
+		'Your hands are tied. A metal ring, fastened by a leather gag, is inside your mouth, keeping it pried open.'
+		'You have to endure a very rough mouth fuck. He knows no limits and gags you as much as he wants. He does let you breathe from time to time, but for most of the experience you feel like passing out. Your saliva is all over his dick and drips onto your tits and stomach.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 		gs 'stat'
 
@@ -856,9 +856,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureA2':
 	pain['nipples'] += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturea2.jpg"></center>'
 	'Your tormentor secures a rope around your neck and starts to play with your idle nipples.'
-	'As your nipples harden he firmly attaches the rope to them and tightens it around your neck.'
+	'As your nipples harden, he firmly attaches the rope to them and tightens it around your neck.'
 	'"Ouch! It hurts... please remove it!"'
-	'In response, the tormentor slaps a gag in your mouth and walks away which leaves you alone.'
+	'In response, the tormentor slaps a gag in your mouth and walks away, leaving you alone.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -871,11 +871,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureA3':
 	pain['asshole'] += 5
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturea3.jpg"></center>'
-	'After a while the tormentor comes back and brings a dildo that''s attached to long stick.'
-	'"Mmmphh!" It is the only sound you are able to shout in protest about what''s coming to you.'
+	'After a while, the tormentor comes back and brings a dildo that''s attached to a long stick.'
+	'"Mmmphh!" is the only sound you are able to make in protest of what''s coming towards you.'
 	'Without any warning, he stuffs the dildo inside your ass. It goes so deep that you can feel it push against your intestines.'
 	'He secures the stick to the ground then leaves the room.'
-	'You swing on the rope to the left and right as you try to push it out of your ass. However, it is too deep inside of you and the stick does not move.'
+	'You swing on the rope to the left and right as you try to push it out of your ass. However, it is too deep inside of you, and the stick does not move.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -888,7 +888,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureA4':
 	pain['tummy'] += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/torturea4.jpg"></center>'
 	'After what seems like an eternity, the tormentor comes back again.'
-	'Pleased to find you with tears and saliva all over your tits and stomach he unscrews the stick.'
+	'Pleased to find you with tears and saliva all over your tits and stomach, he unscrews the stick.'
 	'As a last sign of the torture, he pushes the stick even deeper inside you in a single stroke then swiftly takes it out.'
 	'You start to tremble a lot, but you know it is finally over.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
@@ -914,9 +914,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB2':
 	menu_off = 1
 	pain['asscheeks'] += 10
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You can hear your tormentor going back to you.'
-	'"Uummmphh!" It is the sound your gagged mouth makes as the cane suddenly strikes your ass.'
-	'You are given thorough ass whipping.'
+	'You hear your tormentor coming back towards you.'
+	'"Uummmphh!" is the sound your gagged mouth makes as the cane suddenly strikes your ass.'
+	'You are given a thorough ass whipping.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -930,9 +930,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB3':
 	pain['vaginal'] += 2
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb3.jpg"></center>'
-	'As soon as the whipping stops you can feel pain in your arse and pussy.'
+	'As soon as the whipping stops, you feel a new source of pain in your arse and pussy.'
 	'Something is being pushed inside both of your holes.'
-	'You are given no time to adjust and both holes are fucked viciously, fast and deep.'
+	'You are given no time to adjust, and both holes are fucked viciously, fast and deep.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -945,7 +945,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureB4':
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortureb4.jpg"></center>'
-	'Finally, your pussy and anus are left alone. Whatever what was inside of you has been removed.'
+	'Finally, your pussy and anus are left alone. Whatever was inside of you has been removed.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
 
@@ -956,7 +956,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureC1':
 	'Your tormentor looks angry. Your hands are tied behind your back and your legs also...'
 	'He attaches a rope to your feet - you are lifted like a pig to be cleaned!'
 	'After some minutes of just hanging, your tormentor comes at you with a leather whip.'
-	'He spins you around and whips whatever comes before him. Ass, back, belly, pussy, legs, tits. The whip hits your exposed flesh to leave angry looking welts behind.'
+	'He spins you around and whips whatever comes before him. Ass, back, belly, pussy, legs, tits. The whip hits your exposed flesh and leaves angry looking welts behind.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -998,7 +998,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD2':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured2.jpg"></center>'
 	'You are forced down on your knees on top of some kind of weird bench. The ropes are fixed so you cannot move an inch.'
 	'Not being able to see what is going on behind you, you suddenly feel something cold touching your asshole.'
-	'With single thrust something is shoved really deep inside your anus.'
+	'With a single thrust, something is shoved really deep inside your anus.'
 	'Tears stream down your face and you cry out loudly...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1011,10 +1011,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD3':
 	menu_off = 1
 	pcs_throat += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured3.jpg"></center>'
-	'Next is your tender pussy. He''s not giving you any time to adjust the dildo is shoved in.'
-	'Last comes your mouth. Finally, you can see what is being inserted into your every hole.'
-	'Dildos were attached to long wooden sticks.'
-	'The sticks are fixed tightly to the device - if you move just a bit any one of them gets shoved even deeper. It brings you even more discomfort and pain to your already abused body.'
+	'Next is your tender pussy. He shoves the dildo in, not giving you any time to adjust.'
+	'Last comes your mouth. Finally, you can see what is being inserted into your every hole: dildos attached to long wooden sticks.'
+	'The sticks are fixed tightly to the device - if you move just a bit, any one of them gets shoved even deeper. It brings you even more discomfort and pain to your already abused body.'
 	'Your tormentor walks away to leave you in this state for what feels like an eternity.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 60, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1046,7 +1045,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTortureD5':
 	gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'Master'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/tortured5.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Even though your head is spinning and everything is aching inside you, you are able to make him cum in few minutes of work.'
+	'Even though your head is spinning and everything is aching inside you, you are able to make him cum in a few minutes of work.'
 	'Being bound, he shows you no remorse and fucks you raw before cumming in your very sore throat.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
@@ -1080,11 +1079,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdSoldSauna':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'"A nice lady from an established business" he smiles.'
 	'You are blindfolded and led away to a car.'
-	'After some time, you are led through doors and finally you can see. You are in a backroom of a brothel.'
-	'"Madame, "I paid 8000 for you bitch. Don''t make me regret this."'
-	'"Yes, madame."'
-	'"I''m not a bad person. If you earn me at least five times more than what I paid I may let you go."'
-	'With this faint sign of hope she leaves you alone.'
+	'After some time, you are led through doors and finally the blindfold is removed. You are in a backroom of a brothel.'
+	'"The madame of the brothel stands before you, "I paid 8000 <b>₽</b> for you bitch. Don''t make me regret this."'
+	'"Yes, madame" you reply'
+	'"I''m not a bad person" she continues. "If you earn me at least five times more than what I paid, I may let you go."'
+	'With this faint sign of hope, she leaves you alone.'
 	workDolg = 40000
 
 	painkiller = painkiller_bak
@@ -1107,7 +1106,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomer':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailed.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'With anger you are led back to the basement.'
+	'Angrily, your master leads you back to the basement.'
 
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomer1'
 end
@@ -1117,7 +1116,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomer1':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailed1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Your master looks very upset.'
-	'First, he takes some ropes and ties you up. Your breasts start to turn purple from the lack of blood circulation, because of how tightly fastened they are.'
+	'First, he takes some ropes and ties you up. Your breasts start to turn purple from the lack of blood circulation because of how tightly fastened they are.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1129,7 +1128,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomer2':
 	menu_off = 1
 	pain['asshole'] += 2
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailed2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Being tied up and unable to resist in any way a considerable plug is forced into your anus with little warning.'
+	'He then forces a considerable plug into your anus with little warning. Being tied up, you cannot resist in any way.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1142,9 +1141,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomer3':
 	pain['mouth'] += 5
 	pain['throat'] += 10
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailed3.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You''re blindfolded and ring gag is attached, which stops you from closing your mouth. You are completely helpless and at the whims for any use or torture.'
-	'After some time of relative quiet, you hear someone coming. In a matter of seconds, someone grabs your head. He pushes his warm cock into your mouth and down your throat.'
-	'You panic and freak out, but he doesn''t let go. You are suffocating.'
+	'Continuing, he blindfolds you and attaches a ring gag, which stops you from closing your mouth. With you now completely helpless, you hear him walking away, leaving you to wonder what he has planned next.'
+	'After some time of relative quiet, you hear someone coming. In a matter of seconds, someone grabs your head. He pushes his warm cock into your mouth and down your throat, making it impossible to breathe.'
+	'You panic and freak out, but he doesn''t let go until you are on the verge of passing out.'
+	'Only then does he stop, not letting you escape into unconsciousness.'
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1166,10 +1166,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerElectro1':
 	pain['nipples'] += 20
 	pain['breasts'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedelectro1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Next, your restraints are removed, but you are led to a wall to be chained anew to a different device.'
-	'This time, you can see everything - but you probably wish you hadn''t.'
-	'Electrodes are taped to your nipples , clitoris, and vagina.'
-	'Your master takes few steps back and pushes a button on a remote - in that moment an electric shock goes through your whole body, making you shake like a wobbly gelatin.'
+	'Your restraints are removed, but you are led to a wall to be chained anew to a different device.'
+	'This time, you can see everything - but you wish you couldn''t.'
+	'Electrodes are taped to your nipples, clitoris, and vagina.'
+	'Your master takes a few steps back and pushes a button on a remote. In that moment, an electric shock goes through your whole body, making you shake like a wobbly gelatin.'
 	'You moan loudly and beg for him to stop.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1183,11 +1183,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerElectro2':
 	pain['asshole'] += 20
 	pain['tummy'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedelectro2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Your legs are pulled into the air and restrained to a wall - you are hanging by your hands with both of your holes fully at their disposal.'
+	'Your legs are pulled into the air and restrained to a wall. You hang by your hands with both of your holes fully at their disposal.'
 	'The first plug is violently taken out with a loud "SCHLOP".'
-	'However your anus isn''t left empty for long as in a few moments a new plug is inserted. Fear grips you as you see the wires hanging out of it.'
-	'The remote button is pushed again and this time you can feel it all inside your intestines and anus.'
-	'The sensation is very strange, it''s as if your belly was full of popping popcorn.'
+	'However, your anus isn''t left empty for long as in a few moments a new plug is inserted. Fear grips you as you see the wires hanging out of it.'
+	'The remote button is pushed again, and this time you can feel it all inside your intestines and anus.'
+	'The sensation is very strange. It''s as if your belly was full of popping popcorn.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -1204,12 +1204,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerElectro3':
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedelectro3.jpg"></center>'
-	'Finally your torment is at an end.'
-	'"Remember this lesson slave. If you disappoint a customer again a more severe punishment may be forced upon you."'
-	'"If you are found to be more trouble than you are worth one of our more perverse customers will pay us well for the opportunity to torture you to death."'
+	'Finally, your torment is at an end.'
+	'"Remember this lesson slave. If you disappoint a customer again, a more severe punishment may be forced upon you."'
+	'"If you are found to be more trouble than you are worth, one of our more perverse customers will pay us well for the opportunity to torture you to death."'
 	'You just nod that you understand and remain silent.'
 	*nl
-	'Your master leaves without another word - and you are left hanging like that!'
+	'Your master leaves without another word - and you are left hanging on the wall!'
 	'You are tired, everything hurts, and there seems to be no sign of when or if at all you will be removed from this terrible bondage.'
 
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack'
@@ -1221,7 +1221,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook1':
 	pain['asshole'] += 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedhook1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'You are put on all fours and chained. Your ass is high in the air, showing both your holes to anyone standing behind you.'
-	'Somebody you don''t see comes up from behind to remove the buttplug with loud "SCHLOP" and immediately after... very violently... shoves something cold inside your anus.'
+	'Somebody you don''t see comes up from behind to remove the buttplug with a loud "SCHLOP" and immediately after... very violently... shoves something cold inside your anus.'
 	'You cry in both pain and surprise.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1235,9 +1235,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook2':
 	pain['labia'] += 20
 	pain['clitoris'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedhook2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Trying to look behind you, you can see your master bring something in his hands.'
+	'Trying to look behind you, you see your master bring something in his hands.'
 	'He puts it up against your pussy and suddenly it starts to vibrate.'
-	'The intensity is too much for you and instead of bringing you pleasure - it feels like a devious mix of intense pain and orgasmic pulses.'
+	'The intensity is too much for you, and instead of bringing you pleasure, it feels like a devious mix of intense pain and orgasmic pulses.'
 	'After a while, you piss yourself while experiencing something like a very painful orgasm.'
 	$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_vibe', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
@@ -1252,8 +1252,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook3':
 	pain['vaginal'] += 10
 	pain['cervix'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedhook3.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Your pussy is very sensitive after the vibrator treatment - and your master knows that all too well.'
-	'He slams his dick deep inside you to hit your cervix. It seems to you that he is doeing it on purpose.'
+	'Your pussy is very sensitive after the vibrator treatment, and your master knows that all too well.'
+	'He slams his dick deep inside you to hit your cervix. It seems to you that he is doing it on purpose.'
 	'You try to beg for mercy, but he just doesn''t care. He wants you to suffer - this is your punishment...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -1272,13 +1272,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerHook4':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefailedhook4.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Finally, you faint from all the abuse.'
-	'You wake up alone in the room, but your position has been changed while you were unconcious.'
+	'You wake up alone in the room, but your position has been changed while you were unconscious.'
 	'You are bound on some kind of a stool, hands tied together, and most importantly, your ass is lifted in the air and hanging by the hook.'
-	'You start to realize the pain of hanging by your asshole - so you try to push your legs up to move your ass even higher.'
+	'You start to realize the pain of hanging by your asshole, so you try to push your legs up to move your ass even higher.'
 	'However, you can only remain in that position for a little while before you get tired and relax your legs. The pain quickly returns to your hook elevated asshole.'
 	'No one is near and you already know all too well that no one will take pity on you anyway...'
 	*nl
-	'You just have to wait hoping this part of punishment will end soon.'
+	'You just have to wait hoping this part of your punishment will end soon.'
 
 	act 'Wait':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack'
 end
@@ -1305,12 +1305,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip2':
 	pain['clitoris'] += 10
 	pain['asscheeks'] += 20
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'After a while, he cools down but your pussy is already red as a tomato.'
+	'After a while, he cools down, but your pussy is already red as a tomato.'
 	'He grabs you by your hair and leads you to another device. You have to lie down on your shoulders and put your ass high in the air.'
 	'He affixes you into this uncomfortable position with some straps and pipes.'
 	*nl
-	'Being content with your looks, how helpless and at his disposal you are, He grabs a rubber baton after seeing how you''re helpless and easy to torture while being content with how you look..'
-	'His hits you, especially targeting your exposed labia, by slapping you very hard and causing intense pain to shoot through your body.'
+	'Content with how helpless and at his disposal you are, he grabs a rubber baton.'
+	'His hits you, especially targeting your exposed labia, slapping you very hard and causing intense pain to shoot through your body.'
 	'From time to time, he alternates, by giving your asscheeks an even harder hit.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1326,10 +1326,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip3':
 	pain['asshole'] += 10
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip3.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'As if it wasn''t hard enough, your master brings a long dildo attached to a stick.'
-	'With one stroke he penetrates your dry ass and fixes the stick to the wall. The stick is not wooden... it is metal and very heavy - its own weight enough to push your guts aside as it presses against your intestinal walls.'
+	'As if baton wasn''t enough, your master reaches for a long dildo attached to a stick.'
+	'With one stroke he penetrates your dry ass and fixes the stick to the wall. The stick is not wooden... it is metal and very heavy, its own weight enough to push your guts aside as it presses against your intestinal walls.'
 	*nl
-	'He then brings a different weapon - a cat-o-nine whip that''s made of leather.'
+	'He then picks up a different weapon - a cat-o-nine whip that''s made of leather.'
 	'His target is the same - your poor labia and clitoris.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 20, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation', 'rough'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1346,13 +1346,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerWhip4':
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	pcs_ass += 1
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorewhip4.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'After this even rougher punishment you are on a brink of fainting.'
-	'Your master brings another device on a stick - it is a vibrator with large head.'
-	'Your position is ideal for this - he buries the head nicely deep between your labia while touching your clitoris directly.'
+	'After this even rougher punishment, you are on the brink of fainting.'
+	'Your master brings another device on a stick - a vibrator with a large head.'
+	'He buries the head nicely deep between your labia while touching your clitoris directly, your position ideal for this.'
 	*nl
 	'When the device is turned on, you realize it must be on the highest setting. It almost makes you go crazy right away!'
-	'Your master leaves and you are left alone with this device turned on. The anal dildo still pushing deep into your ass and everything aches from this inhuman position.'
-	'You faint every now and then you have strong orgasms mixed with lot of pain. You shake like gelatin.'
+	'Your master leaves, and you are left alone with this device turned on, the anal dildo still pushing deep into your ass as well. Everything aches from this inhuman position.'
+	'You pass in and out of consciousness, every now and then having strong orgasms mixed with lot of pain. You shake like gelatin.'
 	'The only sounds in the room are your moans and the humming of the vibrator...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_vibe', 240, 'sub', 'bound', 'maso', 'humiliation'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -1364,7 +1364,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdFailedCustomerChainedBack':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/chainedback.jpg"></center>'
-	'After what seems as an eternity, you''re unbound and returned to your usual place, again restrained to the wall.'
+	'After what seems like an eternity, you''re unbound and returned to your usual place, again restrained to the wall.'
 
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 end
@@ -1377,7 +1377,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildos':
 	dildoHorse = 35
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildos1.jpg"></center>'
 	'You take the dildos from the ground and clean them up a bit in the shower.'
-	'There are four of them: small, regular, big, and one that''s horse sized.'
+	'There are four of them: small, regular, big, and horse sized.'
 
 	act 'Train your ass':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalGate'
 	act 'Train your mouth':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthGate'
@@ -1421,7 +1421,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosSmall':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_vag > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that your pussy can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 	else
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 	end
@@ -1439,7 +1439,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosSmallUse':
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildossmallhurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
+		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += 5
 		pcs_vag += 1
@@ -1452,7 +1452,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosRegular':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_vag >= dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that your pussy can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosRegularUse'
 	elseif pcs_vag <= dildoRegular and pcs_vag > dildoSmall:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
@@ -1469,11 +1469,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosRegularUse':
 	dick = 20
 	if pcs_vag > dildoRegular:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosregular.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start fucking the dildo with ease, your pussy swallows it whole without any problem.'
+		'You start fucking the dildo with ease. Your pussy swallows it whole without any problem.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosregularhurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
+		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += 5
 		pcs_vag += 1
@@ -1486,7 +1486,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosBig':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_vag >= dildoBig:
-		'You feel that your pussy can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosBigUse'
 	elseif pcs_vag <= dildoBig and pcs_vag > dildoRegular:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy making it a bit deeper and wider.'
@@ -1503,11 +1503,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosBigUse':
 	dick = 30
 	if pcs_vag > dildoBig:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosbig.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start fucking the dildo with ease, your pussy swallows it whole without any problem.'
+		'You start fucking the dildo with ease. Your pussy swallows it whole without any problem.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosbighurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
+		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += 5
 		pcs_vag += 1
@@ -1520,7 +1520,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosHorse':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_vag >= dildoHorse:
-		'You feel that your pussy can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your pussy can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosHorseUse'
 	elseif pcs_vag <= dildoHorse and pcs_vag > dildoBig:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your pussy, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
@@ -1541,7 +1541,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosHorseUse':
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildoshorsehurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
+		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += 5
 		pcs_vag += 1
@@ -1555,7 +1555,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalSmall':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_ass > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that your anus can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 	else
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus making it a bit deeper and wider.'
 	end
@@ -1573,7 +1573,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalSmallUse':
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosanalsmallhurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
+		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['asshole'] += 5
 		pcs_ass += 1
@@ -1586,7 +1586,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegular':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_ass >= dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that your anus can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegularUse'
 	elseif pcs_ass <= dildoRegular and pcs_ass > dildoSmall:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus making it a bit deeper and wider.'
@@ -1607,7 +1607,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalRegularUse':
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosanalregularhurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
+		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['asshole'] += 5
 		pcs_ass += 1
@@ -1620,7 +1620,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalBig':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_ass >= dildoBig:
-		'You feel that your anus can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalBigUse'
 	elseif pcs_ass <= dildoBig and pcs_ass > dildoRegular:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus, making it a bit deeper and wider.'
@@ -1641,7 +1641,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalBigUse':
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosanalbighurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
+		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['asshole'] += 5
 		pcs_ass += 1
@@ -1654,7 +1654,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalHorse':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_ass >= dildoHorse:
-		'You feel that your anus can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your anus can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosAnalHorseUse'
 	elseif pcs_ass <= dildoHorse and pcs_ass > dildoBig:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your anus making it a bit deeper and wider.'
@@ -1675,7 +1675,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosAnalHorseUse':
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosanalhorsehurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
+		'You start to fuck yourself with this dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['asshole'] += 5
 		pcs_ass += 1
@@ -1688,7 +1688,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthSmall':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_throat > dildoSmall:
-		'You feel that your throat can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 	else
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat making it a bit deeper.'
 	end
@@ -1706,7 +1706,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthSmallUse':
 		gs 'arousal', 'deepthroat', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosmouthsmallhurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to sucking the dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle and pushing it as deep as possible while trying not to suffocate.'
+		'You start to suck the dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle and pushing it as deep as possible while trying not to suffocate.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['throat'] += 5
 		pcs_throat += 1
@@ -1719,7 +1719,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegular':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_throat >= dildoRegular:
-		'You feel that your throat can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegularUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoRegular and pcs_throat > dildoSmall:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat making it a bit deeper.'
@@ -1740,7 +1740,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthRegularUse':
 		gs 'arousal', 'deepthroat', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosmouthregularhurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to sucking the dild, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle and pushing it as deep as possible while trying not to suffocate.'
+		'You start to suck the dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle and pushing it as deep as possible while trying not to suffocate.'
 		'It hurts but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['throat'] += 5
 		pcs_throat += 1
@@ -1753,7 +1753,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthBig':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_throat >= dildoBig:
-		'You feel that your throat can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthBigUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoBig and pcs_throat > dildoRegular:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat making it a bit deeper.'
@@ -1770,11 +1770,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthBigUse':
 	dick = 30
 	if pcs_throat > dildoBig:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosmouthbig.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start sucking the dildo with ease your throat swallows it whole without any problem.'
+		'You start sucking the dildo with ease as your throat swallows it whole without any problem.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'deepthroat', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosmouthbighurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to sucking the dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle and pushing it as deep as possible while trying not to suffocate.'
+		'You start to suck the dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle and pushing it as deep as possible while trying not to suffocate.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['throat'] += 5
 		pcs_throat += 1
@@ -1787,7 +1787,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorse':
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_throat >= dildoHorse:
-		'You feel that your throat can accomodate this dildo easily.'
+		'You feel that your throat can accommodate this dildo easily.'
 		act 'Use it':gt 'abduction', 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorseUse'
 	elseif pcs_throat <= dildoHorse and pcs_throat > dildoBig:
 		'You feel that this dildo will stretch your throat making it a bit deeper.'
@@ -1804,12 +1804,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdTrainDildosMouthHorseUse':
 	dick = dildoHorse
 	if pcs_throat > dildoHorse:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosmouthhorse.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start sucking the dildo with ease while your throat swallows it whole without any problem.'
+		'You start sucking the dildo with ease as your throat swallows it whole without any problem.'
 		gs 'stat'
 		gs 'arousal', 'deepthroat', 60
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoredildosmouthhorsehurt.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You start to suck the dildo knowing it is bigger than what you can handle and pushing it as deep as possible while trying not to suffocate.'
+		'You start to suck the dildo, knowing it is bigger than what you can handle and pushing it as deep as possible while trying not to suffocate.'
 		'It hurts, but you can feel that some progress was made.'
 		pain['throat'] += 5
 		pcs_throat += 1

locations/abductionCustomer.qsrc

@@ -3,7 +3,7 @@
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGate':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'Your master approaches you, "Hello, slave slut."'
-	'"I have a customer here, who came to rent you for a while. Do whatever he asks of you."'
+	'"I have a customer here who came to rent you for a while. Do whatever he asks of you."'
 	buyout = 0
 	act 'Yes, Master.':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomerGo'
 end
@@ -23,12 +23,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomerGo':
 	i = rand(1,3)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/ledonfour<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'Your master removes your regular chains and attaches a leash to your collar.'
-	'You are being led up the stairs into the house above your cellar.'
-	'When you enter the hall your master orders you on your knees, "Kneel slave then continue on your four legs just like the bitch you are."'
+	'You are led up the stairs into the house above your cellar.'
+	'When you enter the hall, your master orders you on your knees, "Kneel slave then continue on your four legs just like the bitch you are."'
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
 		'You are led to the room where your customer awaits. Your leash is handed to him.'
 	else
-		'You are led to the room where your customer awaits. Your leash is handed to him and your master leaves. The only room door closes behind him leaving you alone with your customer.'
+		'You are led to the room where your customer awaits. Your leash is handed to him, and your master leaves. The room''s only door closes behind him, leaving you alone with your customer.'
 	end
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer'
 end
@@ -177,7 +177,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 		'As you are led to the room, as usual, you see the man standing opposite of you.'
 		'Right away you can see that he is just another bastard coming here to use your <<age>> years young body.'
 		'Your master leaves you in the center of the room. You are still kneeling with the leash attached to your collar.'
-		'As the door closes behind him the customer slowly turns, so you can finally see his face.'
+		'As the door closes behind him, the customer slowly turns, so you can finally see his face.'
 		act 'Look at his face':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyout1'
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneelmaster.mp4"></video></center>'
@@ -187,12 +187,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 	end
 
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
-		'Your master tells the customer, "So this is her. You can make sure she''s a virgin as her hymen is intact."'
+		'Your master tells the customer, "So this is her. You can be sure she''s a virgin as her hymen is intact."'
 		'"I believe you. She''s not the first virgin slut that you''ve delivered to me, is she?"'
 		'"No, she definitely is not! How many has it been so far, four, five?"'
-		'"In your establishment I have paid for six virgins in total. This one is the seventh.'
+		'"In your establishment, I have paid for six virgins in total. This one is the seventh.'
 		if age < 17:
-			'"Good number. Good slut, too. She''s only <<age>> years old, I suppose her vagina will be especially tight."'
+			'"Good number. Good slut, too. She''s only <<age>> years old. I suppose her vagina will be especially tight."'
 			'"That''s how I like it."'
 		else
 			'"Good number. She''s a good slut, too."'
@@ -201,7 +201,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer':
 		act 'Sob and wait':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin1'
 	else
 		if buyout = 0:
-			'He is clearly expecting you to start work in pleasuring him. You decide to:'
+			'He is clearly expecting you to start working to pleasure him. You decide to:'
 			act 'Show him your beautiful body':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-show'
 			act 'Unzip his pants':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-unzip'
 		end
@@ -210,17 +210,17 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout1':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/leonid/leonid.jpg"></center>'
-	'As you look up at his face a chill runs down your spine - you know him!'
+	'As you look up at his face, a chill runs down your spine - you know him!'
 	'You remember this man from one of the parent-school conferences. It''s Dimka''s dad, <<$bName>>..'
 	'And obviously he recognizes you too, "Oh... what the... who do we have here? Isn''t this the known missing person, <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>?'
 	'With a trembling voice only a few words leave your mouth, "Th...that''s me mister <<$bSurname>>.."'
 	'"You do realize that the police have already given up searching for you. As if they made any effort though..."'
 	'"I-I don''t even know how long I''ve been here. The only thing I remember is being a plaything for these perverts..."'
-	'After these words there is a short period of silence. You just keep kneeling, as you are trained with your back straight and breasts jutting forward, so you give your customers something nice to look at.'
+	'After these words there is a short period of silence. Despite the unexpected situation, you keep kneeling with your back straight and breasts jutting forward, as you have been trained so your customers have something nice to look at.'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneel2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Then suddenly the look on <<$bName>>''s face changes from surprised to something else.'
+	'Then suddenly, the look on <<$bName>>''s face changes from surprised to something else.'
 	'He comes up to you and gently caresses your face, "Plaything, you say? And do you like it?"'
-	'Surprised by such a question you wait with your answer:'
+	'Surprised by such a question, you consider how to reply:'
 	
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'hard'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -239,20 +239,20 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout2':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorekneelmaster.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'"What a nice submissive slut you have become. What would your mother say about this?"'
-	'"I rather you wouldn''t let her know how I ended up."'
+	'"I''d rather you didn''t let her know how I ended up."'
 	'"This establishment really gets the job done. I must commend the owner."'
-	'With these words he leaves the room. You can hear an echo of a discussion between him and your master.'
-	'After a while <<$bName>> comes back, "Let''s go <<$pcs_firstname>>.". He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room to enter into the hallway.'
+	'With these words, he leaves the room. You can hear an echo of a discussion between him and your master.'
+	'After a while, <<$bName>> comes back, "Let''s go <<$pcs_firstname>>.". He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
 	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I have never been in this part of the house before."'
 	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you. I paid for you. You are now my property. You are... my slavegirl."'
-	'Surprised you can only think, it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones.'
+	'Surprised. you can only think, "it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones."'
 	'You are still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into his trunk.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout3':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreleonid1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'"In that case let''s have some fun before we get straight to business."'
-	'He slaps your face so hard that you lose your balance and fall face first into the floor.'
+	'"In that case, let''s have some fun before we get straight to business."'
+	'He slaps your face so hard that you lose your balance and fall face first onto the floor.'
 	'You are taken by surprise by the blow - you had started to think that you were finally about to be saved from all of this.'
 	'However, <<$bName>> seems to be as perverted as all the other men that have used you previously.'
 	'Stepping above you as you helplessly lie on the floor, he opens his zipper to pull out his dick.'
@@ -273,21 +273,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout3':
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyout4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorefuckanalroughleonid2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You are left lying on the floor while <<$bName>>''s cum still flowing out of your gaping ass.'
+	'You are left lying on the floor with <<$bName>>''s cum still flowing out of your gaping ass.'
 	'He goes through the door. You can hear an echo of your master''s and his voices discussing something you can''t make out.'
-	'In a few minutes <<$bName>> comes back, "I really like you <<$pcs_firstname>>."'
-	'He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room to enter into the hallway.'
+	'In a few minutes, <<$bName>> comes back, "I really like you <<$pcs_firstname>>."'
+	'He grabs your leash and leads you outside the room into the hallway.'
 	'"B-but... where are you taking me? I have never been in this part of the house."'
 	'"You still don''t understand, do you slut? I own you now. I''ve bought you. I paid for you. You are now my property. You are... my slavegirl."'
-	'Surprised you can only think, it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones.'
+	'Surprised you can only think, "it''s better to be used by one man than by many random ones."'
 	'You are still naked and collared as he leads you outside to his car. You are forced to get into his trunk.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-buyoutLeave':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/garage.jpg"></center>'
-	'Stuffed inside of the trunk you can only hear the sound of the engine and the pavement below as he drives you somewhere unknown.'
-	'After an unknown amount of time, the sound of the pavement stops and the engine shuts off. Their echoes from bouncing off the walls cease leaving only silence.'
-	'<<$bName>> opens the trunk. Your eyes blink to adjust to the dimly lit area and you that you are in a parking garage. There are no open spaces between the current level and the above one, so you think to yourself that this is underground.'
+	'Stuffed inside of the trunk, you can only hear the sound of the engine and the pavement below as he drives you somewhere unknown.'
+	'After an unknown amount of time, the sound of the pavement stops, and the engine shuts off, leaving only silence.'
+	'<<$bName>> opens the trunk. Your eyes blink to adjust to the dimly lit area, and you realize that you are in a parking garage. There are no open spaces between the current level and the above one, so you think to yourself that this is underground.'
 	'You climb out still naked and collared like a bitch. It seems he doesn''t care about your feelings at all.'
 	'He takes your leash and leads you while you are on all fours up the stairs. You both exit through the upstairs stairwell door into a room that appears to be an office.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'leonid', 'firstTime'
@@ -296,12 +296,12 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin1':
 	minut += 10
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin1.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Your master leaves and your body starts to shiver.'
+	'Your master leaves, and your body starts to shiver.'
 	'"Don''t worry slut, because this will only hurt a lot," the customer says. He is clearly enjoying himself.'
 	'You run to the far corner of the room. It''s a futile attempt to get as far away from him as you can.'
 	'He walks up to you and grabs you by the hair. He drags you as a painful, terrified scream emits from your throat to something that looks like a bench in the center of the room.'
-	'He forcefully yanks your hair to make you climb onto the bench like structure. He punches you in the stomach and you collapse. He flips you over onto your back and binds your arms above your head with handcuffs. He follows with putting your legs into stirrups then follows with legcuffs to hold you in place. You realize that this gives him unlimited access to your virgin pussy.'
-	'Your head is bound so that you have an unobstructed view on your own pussy. This is to ensure that you watch as he tears your terrorified cunt apart.'
+	'He forcefully yanks your hair to make you climb onto the bench like structure. He punches you in the stomach, and you collapse. He flips you over onto your back and binds your arms above your head with handcuffs. He follows with putting your legs into stirrups then follows with legcuffs to hold you in place. You realize that this gives him unlimited access to your virgin pussy.'
+	'Your head is bound so that you have an unobstructed view on your own pussy. This is to ensure that you watch as he tears your terrified cunt apart.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin2'
 end
@@ -309,8 +309,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin2':
 	minut += 2
 	pcs_mood = 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin2.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He starts to slowly undress, with his back to you, to enhance your terror. With a clink on the floor you can tell that his pants, holding a belt, hits the concrete floor. He slowly turns around to face you and you can finally see his naked body. His cock sways for a moment before stopping in front of your face.'
-	'"With renewed terror you start to cry, because the sight of his <<dick>> cm thick <<$dick_girth>> phallus is just terrifying."'
+	'He starts to slowly undress, with his back to you to enhance your terror. With a clink on the floor, you can tell that his pants, holding a belt, have hit the concrete floor. He slowly turns around to face you, and you can finally see his naked body. His cock sways for a moment before stopping in front of your face.'
+	'"With renewed terror, you start to cry at the sight of his <<dick>> cm thick <<$dick_girth>> phallus."'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin3'
 end
@@ -318,18 +318,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin3':
 	minut += 10
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin3.jpg"></center>'
 	'He starts to jerk his cock, all the while looking at your eyes then to your bound and helpless nude body. The sight slowly makes his cock hard.'
-	'In his eyes you can see he relishes looking at you in your despair.'
+	'In his eyes, you can see he relishes looking at you in your despair.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin4'
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin4':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin4.jpg"></center>'
-	'He, finally, reaches for you and brings the tip of his phallus to the entrace of your virgin pussy.'
+	'He finally reaches for you and brings the tip of his phallus to the entrance of your virgin pussy.'
 	'He covers his <<$dick_girth>> member in a thick layer of lube then starts to slowly press against the opening of your vagina.'
-	'With his hands he spreads your pussy lips apart to help ease the entry for his member.'
+	'With his hands, he spreads your pussy lips apart to help ease the entry for his member.'
 	'"Now behold girl. You are about to become a woman," he exclaims.'
 	'He pushes it in with a single long thrust that almost hits the bottom of your virgin cunt.'
-	'A terrible pain rips through your body that begins where your hymen was. It spreads like a fire throughout your body. A trickle of red blood runs down the shaft of his cock.'
+	'A terrible pain rips through your body, beginning where your hymen was and spreading like a fire. A trickle of red blood runs down the shaft of his cock.'
 	pcs_vag += 1
 	stat['vaginal'] += 1
 	pain['vaginal'] += 20
@@ -339,8 +339,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin4':
 end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin5':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin5.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'He leaves his cock inside you. He looks directly at your face to enjoy the expression that is on your face that is the reaction to you seeing your blood that is coating his cock.'
-	'He then slams his cock back into you. The pain you feel is renewed while he grunts in pleasure the shows he is enjoying himself.'
+	'He pulls his cock back out and shows it to you, enjoying the expression you make seeing your blood coating it.'
+	'He then slams his cock back into you. The pain you feel is renewed while he grunts in pleasure.'
 	'He feels accomplishment in his handiwork and sneers at you. He brutally thrusts into your pussy over and over again. He often hits your cervix with his <<dick>> cm long thick <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
 	pain['vaginal'] += 10
 	pain['cervix'] += 10
@@ -353,7 +353,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin6':
 	minut += 5
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin6.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'"And now whore you will receive your first cum. You will become the breeder you were always supposed to be."'
-	'As renewed tears streams down your cheeks he spurts his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm <<dick>> cm deep inside your pussy. You can feel hit your cervix and you shudder at the thought of you getting intionally pregnant from this monster.'
+	'As renewed tears streams down your cheeks, he spurts his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm <<dick>> cm deep inside your pussy. You can feel it hit your cervix, and you shudder at the thought of you getting pregnant from this monster.'
 	gs 'cum_call', 'pussy', 'deflowering pervert'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Cry more':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin7'
@@ -361,12 +361,12 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin7':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin7.jpg"></center>'
 	'He rests with his dick deep inside you for a while. He is enjoying the sight of your cries and the despair in your situation.'
-	'"As his <<$dick_girth>> member becomes flaccid it slides free of your abused pussy. He reaches out of sight and brings into view a dildo that looks almost exactly like his own dick. You think that it has probably been modeled from it."'
-	'"My cum that I just gave youis not meant to just drip out of you. You will receive another gift from me. One that will keep my present inside you."'
-	'With these words he lifts your ass in the air so the cum doesn''t flow out then brutally shoves the dildo, shaped after his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock, all the way inside you. The dildo is pushed so deep into you that only its brightly coloured base is peeking out of your abused hole.'
-	'When it''s in he takes some pieces of duct tape and wraps it over your pussy to cover your lips. This keeps the dildo firmly stuck inside.'
-	'He uncuffs you from the bench, but pulls your arms to be behind your back. This is probably to keep you from removing the shaft.'
-	'"Now run slut and enjoy my gifts even more," He leaves laughing.'
+	'"As his <<$dick_girth>> member becomes flaccid, it slides free of your abused pussy. He reaches out of sight and brings into view a dildo that looks almost exactly like his own dick. You think that it has probably been modeled from it."'
+	'"My cum that I just gave you is not meant to just drip out of you. You will receive another gift from me, one that will keep my present inside you."'
+	'With these words, he lifts your ass in the air so the cum doesn''t flow out then brutally shoves the dildo, shaped after his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock, all the way inside you. The dildo is pushed so deep into you that only its brightly coloured base peeks out of your abused hole.'
+	'He then takes some pieces of duct tape and wraps them over your pussy to cover your lips and keep the dildo firmly stuck inside.'
+	'He uncuffs you from the bench, but pulls your arms behind your back. This is probably to keep you from removing the shaft.'
+	'"Now run slut and enjoy my gifts even more," he leaves laughing.'
 	pain['vaginal'] += 10
 	pain['cervix'] += 10
 	pain['belly'] += 20
@@ -389,8 +389,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin9':
 	minut += 480
 	pcs_sleep += 70
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorevirgin9.jpg"></center>'
-	'Still having your hands bound you are put on your bed and tied to the wall on a short leash.'
-	'Your master leaves and you are left lying on the bed. Your vagina is still plugged by this <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dildo.'
+	'Still having your hands bound, you are put on your bed and tied to the wall on a short leash.'
+	'Your master leaves, and you are left lying on the bed. Your vagina is still plugged by this <<dick>> cm long <<$dick_girth>> dildo.'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Try to rest':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-virgin10'
 end
@@ -401,12 +401,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-virgin10':
 	'The sound of your master coming downstairs wakes you up.'
 	'You must have fallen asleep from the exhaustion.'
 	*nl
-	'Kneel and stick your ass high in the air slut.'
+	'"Kneel and stick your ass high in the air slut."'
 	'You are so desperate that you don''t even think about not doing what he orders you to do.'
 	'You just stick your ass as high as possible. It points so he has good access to both your ass and your ruthlessly plugged deflowered pussy.'
 	'Your master kneels down to remove the duct tape with a single pull. You yelp in pain from the tiny pubic hairs that get ripped out with the tape. He puts his fingers inside you to grab the stuck dildo.'
 	'Slowly, he takes it out. Remnants of your virgin blood and the customer''s sperm are smeared all over it.'
-	'Your empty vagina gives you a rush of relief as the cool air rushes in to fill the void.'
+	'Your empty vagina gives you a rush of relief as the cool air flows in to fill the void.'
 	'Your master unties you then adjusts your leash. As he leaves, he tells you, "Be glad that you can be deflowered only once you silly girl."'
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
@@ -425,15 +425,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-unzip':
 	elseif dick >= 25:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip2.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock with horror. You image what terrible things this sizeable penis will do to your tender body.'
+		'You stare at his <<$dick_girth>> cock with horror. You image what terrible things this sizable penis will do to your tender body.'
 	elseif dick < 15 and pcs_throat > dick:
 		*nl
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/unzip3.mp4"></video></center>'
-		'With relief you look at his <<$dick_girth>> cock thinking that it''s nothing you can''t handle.'
+		'With relief, you look at his <<$dick_girth>> cock thinking that it''s nothing you can''t handle.'
 	end
 
 	if pcs_throat < dick:
-		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill and you know you wouldn''t be able to swallow it whole.'	
+		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill level and you know you can''t safely swallow it whole.'	
 		act 'Suck the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckTip'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -448,7 +448,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-unzip':
 			act 'Force yourself on his cock (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
 	else
-		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you''d be able to take it all the way to the balls.'
+		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you could take it all the way to the balls.'
 		act 'Suck the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckTip'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -469,7 +469,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-show':
 	minut += 10
 	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoretease<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'You decide to tease the customer by showing him your sexy breasts and jiggle them.'
+	'You decide to tease the customer by showing him your sexy breasts and jiggling them.'
 	'After some time of behaving like a slut, it is obvious that he wants something more.'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-unzip'
 end
@@ -481,22 +481,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreblowjobtip<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	'You try as best as you can to suck the head of his <<dick>> cm sized <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
 	if pcs_throat < dick:
-		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill and you know you wouldn''t be able to swallow it whole.'	
+		'It''s obvious that his <<$dick_girth>> dick is above your skill level and you know you can''t safely swallow it whole.'	
 	else
-		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you''d be able to take it all the way to the balls.'
+		'Even though his dick is <<$dick_girth>>, you know you could take it all the way to the balls.'
 	end
 
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>> is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously he''s not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
+			'<<$bName>> is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
 		else
 			'Your customer is starting to get very grumpy. He''s obviously not happy that all you can do is suck the tip of his cock.'
 		end
 		'Suddenly... without any warning, he takes a step back which pulls his <<$dick_girth>> member out of your mouth.'
-		'With an angry look in his eyes he slaps your face very hard which knocks you to the cold floor.'
-		'He jumps on top of your chest and with a piece of rope he ties you up.'
-		'"Even here, one must train the slaves himself," He shouts at you. He forces his <<$dick_girth>> dick all the way down your throat.'
-		'With your hands tied up you are unable to resist. All you can do is struggle to avoid suffocating as best you can...'
+		'With an angry look in his eyes, he slaps your face very hard, which knocks you to the cold floor.'
+		'He jumps on top of your chest, and with a piece of rope, he ties you up.'
+		'"Even here, one must train the slaves himself" he shouts at you. He forces his <<$dick_girth>> dick all the way down your throat.'
+		'With your hands tied up, you are unable to resist. All you can do is struggle to avoid suffocating as best you can...'
 		act 'Endure':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-suckForced'
 	elseif $charType = 'neutral':
 		'Your customer seems displeased by your performance. You are starting to worry about what he''ll do if you don''t satisfy him well enough...'
@@ -534,7 +534,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckTip':
 			end
 		end
 	elseif $charType = 'kind':
-		'Your customer seems pleased by your sucking skills, so you continue to tease the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock. You look at him with as much sensual abandon that you can muster under the present conditions.'
+		'Your customer seems pleased by your sucking skills, so you continue to tease the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock. You look at him with as much sensual abandon as you can muster under the present conditions.'
 		act 'Continue sucking the tip':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuck'
 	end
 end
@@ -545,8 +545,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckForceself':
 	gs 'stat'
 	i = rand(1,3)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhoreblowjobselfforced<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'Knowing you will probably hurt yourself you force yourself on his <<dick>> cm long cock all the way down to be balls deep.'
-	'You start gagging and saliva freely flows from your stuffed mouth. Your customer seems more content now.'
+	'Despite knowing you will probably hurt yourself, you force yourself on his <<dick>> cm long cock all the way down to the balls.'
+	'You start gagging, and saliva freely flows from your stuffed mouth. Your customer seems more content now.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'sub', 'rough', 'deepthroat'
 	act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuck'
 end
@@ -565,8 +565,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-suckForced':
 		'Your customer growls and suddenly pulls his cock out of your mouth.'
 	end
 	'"What kind of slave are you when you can''t swallow my <<$dick_girth>> dick?"'
-	'He ties you up and forces his cock down your throat. He shows you little to no concern for your wellbeing.'
-	'You start to gag as he keeps pushing his member deep inside you. Sometimes it leaves you on the brink of passing out.'
+	'He ties you up and forces his cock down your throat. He shows little to no concern for your wellbeing.'
+	'You start to gag as he keeps pushing his member deep inside you. Sometimes this leaves you on the brink of passing out.'
 	vagOrAss = rand (0,1)
 	if buyout = 1:
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough'
@@ -606,9 +606,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuck':
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		*nl
 		'You want to answer him, but the moment you open your mouth to talk he slaps your face very hard. This knocks you down to the cold floor. Tears erupt from your eyes in response.'
-		'"You thought I''m really interested in your slutty opinion," He questionly laughing.'
+		'"You thought I really was interested in your slutty opinion?" He questions, laughing.'
 		'"A whore, and on top of that a slave whore, has no right to have an opinion."'
-		'You are unable to do anything, except whimper like a small child. He ties you up and you know that it''s going to get even worse now.'
+		'You are unable to do anything except whimper like a small child. He ties you up, and you know that it''s going to get even worse now.'
 		vagOrAss = rand (0,1)
 		if vagOrAss = 0:
 			act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckRough'
@@ -678,15 +678,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-beg':
 		endPunishment = 1
 		'A slave has no right to ask what will happen to it!'
 		hardChance = rand(1, 100)
+		'"I will fuck you however I want, so shut up bitch!"'
 		if hardChance <= 50:
-			'"I will fuck you however I want, so shut up bitch!"'
 			if vagOrAss = 0:	
 				act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckRough'
 			else
 				act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalRough'
 			end
 		else
-			'"I will fuck you however way I want, so shut up."'
 			if vagOrAss = 0:	
 				act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckNormal'
 			else
@@ -769,9 +768,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckAnalDeep':
 	'His member is <<$dick_girth>> and your ass is unable to accommodate it.'
 	if $charType = 'sadistic':
 		*nl
-		'But he doesn''t care about it, even though he is obviously aware, as he fucks you furiously hard.'
+		'But he doesn''t care, even though he is obviously aware, and he fucks you furiously hard.'
 		'"How do like my <<$dick_girth>> cock inside you bitch?"'
-		'"Is it deep enough for you or should I push a bit more?"'
+		'"Is it deep enough for you, or should I push a bit more?"'
 		'Obviously, he''s enjoying this a lot. Doing this is probably the reason he came to this slave house.'
 		*nl
 	end
@@ -803,18 +802,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckNormal':
 	if vagDMG <= 0:
 		'He''s not gentle, but it isn''t a very rough fuck either.'
 		'You have no problems accommodating his <<$dick_girth>> dick.'
-		'For some of the moments you almost seem to enjoy it.'
+		'At some moments, you almost seem to enjoy it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub'
 		act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumGate'
 	elseif vagDMG <= 2:
-		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
+		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you, and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'rough'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckDeep'
 	else
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is insanely big for you.'
-		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
+		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix, or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'rough'
@@ -839,16 +838,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckRough':
 			act 'Be silent':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-cumGate'
 		end
 	elseif vagDMG <= 2:
-		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
+		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is too big for you, and you suffer a lot of stretching pain as it bumps against your vaginal walls.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'rough'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-fuckDeep'
 	else
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> dick is insanely big for you.'
-		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
-		'He seems to notice it too and realizes why you''re groaning so loudly.'
-		'Enjoying your suffering, he pushes his dick even deeper inside and you squeal like a pig being stuck.'
+		'The tip of his cock even penetrates your cervix, or at least it seems like it to you. The pain is almost unbearable!'
+		'He notice this too, realizing it''s why you''re groaning so loudly.'
+		'Enjoying your suffering, he pushes his dick even deeper inside, and you squeal like a pig.'
 		pain['vaginal'] += vagDMG * 2
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG * 2
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'bound', 'rough'
@@ -868,15 +867,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-fuckDeep':
 		*nl
 		'But he doesn''t care about that, even though he is obviously aware of it, and fucks you furiously hard.'
 		'"How do like my <<$dick_girth>> cock inside you bitch?"'
-		'"Is it deep enough for you or should I push a bit more?"'
+		'"Is it deep enough for you, or should I push a bit more?"'
 		'"Do you feel me entering your cervix?"'
 		'Obviously he''s enjoying this a lot. Doing this is probably the reason he came to this slave house.'
 		*nl
 	end
-	'With every stroke of his dick deep inside your vagina you feel as if it''s your very cervix being penetrated.'
+	'With every stroke of his dick deep inside your vagina, you feel as if it''s your very cervix being penetrated.'
 	'A large bulge is noticeable every time he shoves it more than half the way inside you.'
 	*nl
-	'After about half an hour of deep vaginal banging the man is about to cum.'
+	'After about half an hour of deep vaginal banging, the man is about to cum.'
 	
 	if endPunishment = 1 or $charType = 'sadistic':
 		'"Now, I will feed you my seed, unruly fuck slave."'
@@ -963,7 +962,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumPussy':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumpussy<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if vagDMG > 0:
 		'As he delivers his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside your vagina, you can feel the tip of his <<$dick_girth>> cock at your cervix and even a bit inside it.'
-		'His bursting cum penetrates through the cervix directly into your womb which causes you both pain and a weird warm sensation.'
+		'His bursting cum penetrates through the cervix directly into your womb, which causes you both pain and a weird warm sensation.'
 		pain['cervix'] += vagDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -978,16 +977,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumPussy':
 	elseif cumVol >= 5:
 		'With his <<$dick_girth>> dick buried very deep inside your pussy, his tip pushes against your cervix and even slides inside of it a bit.'
 		'Then, as he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside you, a lot of it goes directly to your womb.'
-		'It feels painful but the warm sensation is weird and nothing like what you have felt before.'
+		'It feels painful, but the warm sensation is weird and nothing like what you have felt before.'
 		'You feel as if your inner parts are stretching from the <<$cumType>> amount of cum being pumped into you.'
 		*nl
-		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out the lower part of your belly bulges noticably.'
+		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably.'
 		'The customer looks at it with joy then punches at your bulge with his fist.'
 		'The cum bursts out of your pussy as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
 		pain['cervix'] += 20
 		pain['tummy'] += 40
 	else
-		'The customer cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out a small part of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm drips out of your pussy.'
+		'The customer cums inside you. When he takes his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, a small part of his <<$cumType>> amount of sperm drips out of your pussy.'
 	end
 
 	pcs_vag += 1
@@ -1002,9 +1001,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/slavewhorecumass<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	if assDMG > 0:
-		'As he cums inside your anus you can feel the banging of his <<$dick_girth>> cock against your intestinal wall.'
-		'A moving bulge is visible on your otherwise flat stomach as the phallus moves inside you.'
-		'His bursting cum fills you and it seems as if it went backwards up to your very stomach.'
+		'As he cums inside your anus, you can feel the banging of his <<$dick_girth>> cock against your intestinal wall.'
+		'A moving bulge is visible on your otherwise flat stomach as his phallus moves inside you.'
+		'His bursting cum fills you, and it seems as if it went backwards up to your very stomach.'
 		pain['asshole'] += assDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -1012,9 +1011,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 	if cumVol = 3:
 		'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried in your intestines.'
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
+			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
 		else
-			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
+			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum, you can feel the warmth spreading inside you...'
 		end
 		'After his dick is removed, part of the sperm drips out of your gaping hole.'
 	elseif cumVol = 4:
@@ -1022,24 +1021,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumAss':
 		if buyout = 1:
 			'When <<$bName>> shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside, you can feel your stomach grow larger...'
 		else
-			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside the lower part of your belly bulges noticably...'
+			'When he shoots his <<$cumType>> amount of cum inside, the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably...'
 		end
 		'You feel very full, even after he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> dick out of you.'
 		'After a few seconds, a large portion of his <<$cumType>> amount of cum spurts out of you as if from a garden hose.'
 	elseif cumVol >= 5:
 		if buyout = 1:
-			'<<$bName>> <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines. With each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
-			'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep in your intestines. With each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
-			*nl
-			'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines with a <<$cumType>> amount of cum.'
+			'<<$bName>>''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
 		else
-			'His <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep in your intestines. With each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
-			'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines with a <<$cumType>> amount of cum.'
-			*nl
-			'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, the lower part of your belly bulges noticably.'
-			'The customer looks at it with joy then punches at the bulge with his fist.'
-			'The cum burst out of your pussy as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
+			'The customer''s <<$dick_girth>> member is buried <<dick>> centimeters deep inside your intestines with each stroke hitting your intestinal walls forcefully.'
 		end
+		'You feel an increasing amount of pressure and stretching pain as he pumps your intestines with a <<$cumType>> amount of cum.'
+		*nl
+		'When he pulls his <<$dick_girth>> cock out, the lower part of your belly bulges noticeably.'
+		'He looks at the bulge with joy then punches at it with his fist.'
+		'The cum burst out of your anus as if it shot out from an uncorked champagne bottle.'
 		pain['tummy'] += 20
 		gs 'stat'
 	else
@@ -1074,7 +1070,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-cumMouth':
 	if throatDMG > 0:
 		'Your aching throat is penetrated again.'
 		'He buries his <<$dick_girth>> cock to the hilt inside you.'
-		'While he''s cumming directly down your gullet you can feel the pulsing of his member. It painfully stretches your already sore throat.'
+		'While he''s cumming directly down your gullet, you can feel the pulsing of his member. It painfully stretches your already sore throat.'
 		pain['throat'] += throatDMG
 		gs 'stat'
 	end
@@ -1130,21 +1126,20 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-end':
 	if endPunishment = 1:
-		'The customer goes to the bathroom and your master soon returns to you.'
+		'The customer goes to the bathroom and then calls for your master.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-endPunishment'
 	elseif buyout = 1:
-		'<<$bName>> leaves you lying on the ground. His cum still dripping out of your ass.'
+		'<<$bName>> leaves you lying on the ground, his cum still dripping out of your ass, and calls for your master.'
 		act 'Continue':gt 'abductionCustomer', 'abdCustomer-endPunishment'
 	else
-		'The customer goes to the bathroom and you are immediately lead back to the basement.'
+		'The customer goes to the bathroom, and you are immediately lead back to the basement.'
 		act 'Go back':gt 'abduction', 'abdRoom'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'abdCustomer-endPunishment':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/abduction/sex/kneelingslave1.jpg"></center>'
-	'After the customer is done with you, he calls for your master.'
-	'He tells your master how unruly you were and that further training should be applied to you.'
+	iif(buyout = 1, $bName, 'The customer') + ' tells your master how unruly you were and that further training should be applied to you.'
 	'He then leaves.'
 	'Kneeling, you look up at your master only to see his grim face. You can tell something bad will happen.'
 	act 'Be led back to the basement':gt 'abduction', 'abdFailedCustomer'

locations/agentned.qsrc

@@ -19,16 +19,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	*nl
 	'This is the head office of the largest real estate agency in the Leningrad Oblast.'
 	*nl
-	'At the reception you notice a large print banner,'
-	'"Please be aware that all sales transactions are made exclusively through your bank account. Rent payments excluded from this policy."'
+	'At the reception, you notice a large print banner:'
+	'"Please be aware that all sales transactions are made exclusively through your bank account. Rent payments are excluded from this policy."'
 
 	if home_owned[1] = 1 and ArendHouseSL > 0:
 		*nl
-		'You have <B><<ArendHouseSL>> days</B> rental on your St. Petersburg apartment remaining. '+iif(money >= home_rent[1],'You can make a rent <a href="exec:money -= home_rent[1] & home_owned[1] = 1 & ArendHouseSL += ArendHouseSL_due & gs ''$menu_obnovit''">payment</a> in cash.','You can''t afford to pay your rent at the moment')+''
+		'You have <B><<ArendHouseSL>> days</B> remaining on your St. Petersburg apartment lease. '+iif(money >= home_rent[1],'You can make a rent <a href="exec:money -= home_rent[1] & home_owned[1] = 1 & ArendHouseSL += ArendHouseSL_due & gs ''$menu_obnovit''">payment</a> in cash to extend it.','You can''t afford to pay your rent at the moment')+''
 	end
 	if home_owned[4] > 0 and ArendHouseSL4 > 0:
 		*nl
-		'You have <B><<ArendHouseSL4>> days</B> rental on your Pushkin apartment. '+iif(money >= home_rent[4],'You can make a rent <a href="exec:money -= home_rent[4] & home_owned[1] = 1 & ArendHouseSL4 += ArendHouseSL_due & gs ''$menu_obnovit''">payment</a> in cash.','You can''t afford to your pay rent at the moment')+''
+		'You have <B><<ArendHouseSL4>> days</B> remaining on your Pushkin apartment lease. '+iif(money >= home_rent[4],'You can make a rent <a href="exec:money -= home_rent[4] & home_owned[1] = 1 & ArendHouseSL4 += ArendHouseSL_due & gs ''$menu_obnovit''">payment</a> in cash to extend it.','You can''t afford to your pay rent at the moment')+''
 	end
 
 	if home_owned[1] = 2 or home_owned[3] > 0 or home_owned[5] = 1:
@@ -266,9 +266,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent':
 		'We currently have no properties listed for rent.'
 	elseif home_owned[1] = 0 and home_owned[4] = 0:
 		*nl
-		'There are two properties available for rent.'
-		*nl
-		'There are two apartments for available to rent. They are located in the city residential area and in Pushkin.'
+		'There are two apartments available for rent. They are located in the city residential area and in Pushkin.'
 		act 'View the city apartment details': gt 'agentned', 'rent_cityres'
 		act 'View the Pushkin apartment details': gt 'agentned', 'rent_pushkin'
 	elseif home_owned[1] = 0:
@@ -367,7 +365,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rent_pushkin':
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You take the pen and start filling out the paperwork. After writting for an hour, you hand over the money and receive the keys to your new apartment.'
+			'You take the pen and start filling out the paperwork. After writing for an hour, you hand over the money and receive the keys to your new apartment.'
 
 			act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 		end
@@ -432,7 +430,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buy_dacha':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the purchase of a cottage with a garden in the co-op. It''s located 5km away from St. Petersburg. <<$home_value_txt[3]>> <b>₽</b> has been removed from your bank account.'
+	'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the purchase of a cottage with a garden in the co-op. It''s located 5 km away from St. Petersburg. <<$home_value_txt[3]>> <b>₽</b> has been removed from your bank account.'
 
 	act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 end
@@ -455,7 +453,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'buy_Mansion':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Real Estate Agency</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/realestate/agenstvo_paperwork.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the purchase of a lot for building a mansion 1km up the north road. <<$home_value_txt[5]>> <b>₽</b> has been removed from your bank account.'
+	'You spend half an hour filling in the paperwork for the purchase of a lot for building a mansion 1 km up the north road. <<$home_value_txt[5]>> <b>₽</b> has been removed from your bank account.'
 
 	act 'Return':gt'agentned', 'start'
 end

locations/alex.qsrc

@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ frost = 0
 minut += 30
 gs 'boystat', 'A81'
 gs 'stat'
-'Arriving at Alexey''s apartment, he offers you various alcoholic beverages before sitting down at a table in the hall to talk to each other.'
+'Arriving at Alexey''s apartment, he offers you various alcoholic beverages, and the two of you sit down at a table in the hall to talk to each other.'
 'After a while of talking and drinking you feel a bit drunk, and Alexey asks you to come closer.'
 
 act 'Get on your knees and take it in your mouth':
@@ -14,8 +14,8 @@ act 'Get on your knees and take it in your mouth':
 	alexeySex += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/blowjob/bj<<rand(29, 41)>>.jpg"></center>'
 	'Kneeling before him, you unbutton his pants and take a firm grasp of his erect cock.'
-	'Leaning in closer, you give it a quick kiss with your <<$liptalk>> before guiding it your mouth.'
-	'As you suck on his hard dick, Alexey relaxes in his chair letting you take care of his needs.'
+	'Leaning in closer, you give it a quick kiss with your <<$liptalk>> before guiding it to your mouth.'
+	'As you suck on his hard dick, Alexey relaxes in his chair, letting you take care of his needs.'
 	'Suddenly, he removes his penis from your mouth, pulls you up on your feet and leads you to the bedroom.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -30,7 +30,7 @@ act 'Get on your knees and take it in your mouth':
 		gs 'dinsex','vaginal_sex',10,'sub'
 		'Alexey slaps you on your ass with the palm of his hand and says, "You''re wet like a slut already, do you like being fucked like this?"'
 		if analplugin = 1:
-			'<<$boy>> pulls the plug out of your narrow and tight ass.'
+			'Alexey pulls the plug out of your narrow and tight ass.'
 			analplugout = 1
 		end
 		'Without stopping his relentless pounding of your pussy, Alexey smears one of his fingers with your lovejuices, and sticks it in your anus.'

locations/alexgang.qsrc

@@ -6,10 +6,10 @@ frost = 0
 minut += 30
 gs 'stat'
 'After arriving at Alexei''s apartment, he offers you various alcoholic beverages before sitting down at a table in the living room to chat as he always does.'
-'Suddenly, the doorbell rings and Alexei walks towards the door to answer it. You hear a man''s voice in the hallway, "Hello Alexei, I hope I''m not disturbing?" He answers, "Not at all, my friend. Come in."'
+'Suddenly, the doorbell rings, and Alexei walks towards the door to answer it. You hear a man''s voice in the hallway, "Hello Alexei, I hope I''m not disturbing?" He answers, "Not at all, my friend. Come in."'
 
 if alexgangbang = 0:
-	'You''re a little surprised and wondering who it could be, but then you see Alexander, the nightclub owner, enter the room. He greets you as he sits down on a chair.'
+	'You''re a little surprised and wonder who it could be, but then you see Alexander, the nightclub owner, enter the room. He greets you as he sits down on a chair.'
 	'Alexei pours alcohol into three glasses and hands them out. All of you spend some time drinking and talking together. Before long, Alexander asked you to call him by his nickname, Sasha.'
 	'After a while, Alexei puts the bottle aside to pull out his dick from his pants. "Come over here <<$pcs_firstname>>", he commands. You look at him in surprise then glance at Sasha. Alexei urges you on, "C''mon and get over here. Don''t worry since everything is fine."'
 else
@@ -29,7 +29,7 @@ act 'Get on your knees and give head':
 	'Suddenly, he removes his penis from your mouth and pulls you up on your feet. He leads you to his bedroom.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 	gs 'stat'
-	'Alexei lifts you up to put you down in front of the bed where Sasha has seated himself. He tells you to get on all fours with your head placed before Sasha. Sasha who starts to unbutton his pants which leaves no doubt as to what you''re expected to do.'
+	'Alexei lifts you up to put you down in front of the bed where Sasha has seated himself. He tells you to get on all fours with your head placed before Sasha. Sasha starts to unbutton his pants, which leaves no doubt as to what you''re expected to do.'
 
 	act 'Give Sasha a blowjob':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -43,12 +43,12 @@ act 'Get on your knees and give head':
 		gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', 'A88', 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/group/gang<<rand(16, 25)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'Kneeling on all fours, you start sucking Sasha''s limp cock. As you lick, suck, and roll your tongue, while using the shaft with your hands, around his dick that you can feel it slowly stiffen in your mouth.'
+		'Kneeling on all fours, you start sucking Sasha''s limp cock. As you lick, suck, and roll your tongue around his dick while stroking the shaft with your hands, you can feel it slowly stiffen in your mouth.'
 		gs 'dinSex', 'wear_condom'
-		'The position you''re in doesn''t make it easy for you to move your head up and down. However, with some determination you manage to keep Sasha''s cock in your mouth with the help of your hands.'
+		'The position you''re in doesn''t make it easy for you to move your head up and down. However with some determination, you manage to keep Sasha''s cock in your mouth with the help of your hands.'
 		gs 'dinsex','vaginal_sex',10
-		'After a while, you feel Sasha''s hard cock begin to throb in your mouth and hands. With a low grunt, he thrusts his hips forward and you feel his sperm coat the insides of your mouth.'
-		'He doesn''t cum a whole lot, so you can easily manage to swallow all of it. It still doesn''t diminish the inherent thrill of the threesome you just participated in.'
+		'After a while, you feel Sasha''s hard cock begin to throb. With a low grunt, he thrusts his hips forward, and you feel his sperm coat the insides of your mouth.'
+		'He doesn''t cum a whole lot, so you easily manage to swallow all of it. It still doesn''t diminish the inherent thrill of the threesome you just participated in.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub', 'group'
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'

locations/andreihunter.qsrc

@@ -53,7 +53,7 @@ if huntersAndreiQw >= 10:
 				gs 'stat'
 
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You smile sweetly at Andrei while you flirt and you are caught off guard when he suddenly goes in for a kiss.'
+				'You smile sweetly at Andrei while you flirt, and you are caught off guard when he suddenly goes in for a kiss.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -79,7 +79,7 @@ if huntersAndreiQw >= 10:
 							gs 'stat'
 
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterkiss3.jpg"></center>'
-							'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want you", Andrei whispers when your lips finally part You nod eagerly then Andrei gently takes you by the hand and leads you to his bed.'
+							'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, I want you", Andrei whispers when your lips finally part. You nod eagerly then Andrei gently takes you by the hand and leads you to his bed.'
 							act 'Go':gt 'hunterLoveSex','Andrei'
 						end
 					else
@@ -156,7 +156,7 @@ if huntersAndreiLove > 0 and pcs_horny <= 60 and huntersAndreiQw >= 10 and temp
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterlove1.4.jpg"></center>'
-	'As soon as you walked up to Andrei, he pulled you in for a kiss without saying a word. You have no time to get a word in as he pulls you towards him.'
+	'As soon as you walk up to Andrei, he pulls you in for a kiss without saying a word. You have no time to get a word in as he pulls you towards him.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 5
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -167,7 +167,7 @@ if huntersAndreiLove > 0 and pcs_horny <= 60 and huntersAndreiQw >= 10 and temp
 		gs 'stat'
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/hanterhands.jpg"></center>'
-		'You go with Andrei while his hands on your hips. You know how this ends and you really don''t mind.'
+		'You go with Andrei with your hand in his. You know how this ends, and you really don''t mind.'
 
 		gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 5
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ if huntersAndreiQw < 10 and huntersAndreiLove > 0:
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/hunters/brosil.jpg"></center>'
 	'You want to talk to Andrei, but he cuts in before you can say anything.'
 	'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, It''s over between us," he says firmly and walks away.'
-	'"Well , maybe it''s for the best," you think as you leave in the other direction.'
+	'"Well, maybe it''s for the best," you think as you leave in the other direction.'
 
 	act 'Leave':gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end

locations/andrey.qsrc

@@ -6,7 +6,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 	if young_shop_work = 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\manager_andrew.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'You knock on Mr. Sobulyagin''s office door and when he sees you enter his expression hardens. "What do you want," he questions you with a scowl.'
+		'You knock on Mr. Sobulyagin''s office door, and when he sees you enter, his expression hardens. "What do you want," he questions you with a scowl.'
 	end
 
 	if (young_shop_work = 1 and week = 5 and hour = 20) or (young_shop_work1 = 1 and week = 7 and hour = 15) or (young_shop_work2 = 1 and week = 5 and hour = 15):
@@ -33,7 +33,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'apply':
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\manager_andrew.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You knock on the door and someone calls you in from the other side, "You can enter." After you enter, you''re greeted by the sight of a sour-faced older man reading papers at his desk. When he sees you, his expression hardens. "Surprised to see an old man managing a clothing store for teenage girls?" he grunts. You didn''t even say anything yet, but he doesn''t seem to care. "Yeah, I get that a lot...," he adds under his breath before sighing and looking back to his papers. "What do you need?"'
+	'You knock on the door, and someone calls you in from the other side, "You can enter." After you enter, you''re greeted by the sight of a sour-faced older man reading papers at his desk. When he sees you, his expression hardens. "Surprised to see an old man managing a clothing store for teenage girls?" he grunts. You didn''t even say anything yet, but he doesn''t seem to care. "Yeah, I get that a lot...," he adds under his breath before sighing and looking back to his papers. "What do you need?"'
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'pussykats', 'start'
 	act 'Mention the for hire sign':
@@ -42,11 +42,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'apply':
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\manager_andrew.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'He barely glances your way as he shuffles some papers around. "Oh yeah I forgot about that... well, the job is still open. I need an extra worker around the store and it needs to be a girl... a young girl," he says before suddenly dropping the papers to look at you accusingly. "Before you start with that gender equality crap, I had a guy working here and all he cared about was getting into the pants of female customers rather than their wallets. I''m saving myself from another headache...<i>hopefully</i>."'
+		'He barely glances your way as he shuffles some papers around. "Oh yeah I forgot about that... well, the job is still open. I need an extra worker around the store, and it needs to be a girl... a young girl," he says before suddenly dropping the papers to look at you accusingly. "Before you start with that gender equality crap, I had a guy working here, and all he cared about was getting into the pants of female customers rather than their wallets. I''m saving myself from another headache...<i>hopefully</i>."'
 		*nl
-		'You''re at a loss for words. This wasn''t how you imagined the interview to go, but your silence goes unnoticed as the store manager continues to talk. "The salary is 205 ₽ a hour alright? Trust me, no one is fighting you for the chance to work here, but don''t think that means you can slack off. Miss work three times and you''re fired... no questions. I have two part-time positions that are from 16:00 until 20:00 Monday through Friday or the weekend shift between 09:00 to 15:00."'
+		'You''re at a loss for words. This wasn''t how you imagined the interview would go, but your silence goes unnoticed as the store manager continues to talk. "The salary is 205 <b>₽</b> a hour alright? Trust me, no one is fighting you for the chance to work here, but don''t think that means you can slack off. Miss work three times, and you''re fired... no questions. I have two part-time positions that are from 16:00 until 20:00 Monday through Friday or the weekend shift between 09:00 and 15:00."'
 		*nl
-		'He seems to have found what he was looking for, which are the employment documents, "You''ll need to sign these to start work here." He holds them out to you, "So, are you interested?"'
+		'He seems to have found what he was looking for, which is the employment documents, "You''ll need to sign these to start work here." He holds them out to you, "So, are you interested?"'
 
 		act 'Don''t take the job':gt 'pussykats', 'start'
 
@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'apply':
 				young_shop_work = 1
 				minut += 5
 				*nl
-				'You find the conditions suitable and without batting an eye you sign the documents.'
+				'You find the conditions suitable, and without batting an eye, you sign the documents.'
 				'You got a job in the youth clothing store ''Pussy-Cats''. Your first workday is on Monday at 15:00.'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'pussykats', 'start'
 			end
@@ -68,7 +68,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'apply':
 				young_shop_work1 = 1
 				minut += 5
 				*nl
-				'You find the conditions suitable and without batting an eye you sign the documents.'
+				'You find the conditions suitable, and without batting an eye, you sign the documents.'
 				'You got a job in the youth clothing store ''Pussy-Cats''. Your first workday is on Saturday at 09:00.'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'pussykats', 'start'
 			end
@@ -93,26 +93,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'regular':
 	'<b><center><font size="4">Manager Andrew M. Sobulyagin</font></center></b>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\manager_andrew.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'You knock on the door and Mr. Sobulyagin calls you in. Normally, he would be reading the paper, but instead he''s just sitting there with a weird look on his face. It''s almost like you scared him or something.'
+	'You knock on the door, and Mr. Sobulyagin calls you in. Normally, he would be reading the paper, but instead he''s just sitting there with a weird look on his face. It''s almost like you scared him or something.'
 
 	if (week = 5 or week = 7) and young_shop_salary > 0:
 		if young_shop_miss = 0:
-			'"Came to get your pay," he asks quickly to which you nod yes. He beckons you closer and you oblige. He digs around in his desk drawer for your money, and as you wait, you catch a glimpse of his computer screen to see an image of a naked woman. He must think you can''t see the screen from where you are. "Here you go," Mr. Sobulyagin says as he holds out a white envelope with the money inside.'
+			'"Came to get your pay," he asks quickly to which you nod yes. He beckons you closer, and you oblige. He digs around in his desk drawer for your money. As you wait, you catch a glimpse of his computer screen and see an image of a naked woman. He must think you can''t see the screen from where you are. "Here you go," Mr. Sobulyagin says as he holds out a white envelope with the money inside.'
 		elseif young_shop_warned = young_shop_miss and young_shop_miss > 0:
-			'"Came to get your pay," he asks quickly to which you nod yes. He beckons you closer and you oblige. He digs around in his desk drawer for your money, and as you wait, you catch a glimpse of his computer screen to see an image of a naked woman. He must think you can''t see the screen from where you are. "Here you go," Mr. Sobulyagin says as he holds out a white envelope with the money inside.'
-			'"You have missed <<young_shop_miss>> '+iif(young_shop_miss = 1, 'time', 'times')+'," he reminds you. "Don''t make a habit out of it. If you miss work 3 times, I will fire you.'
+			'"Came to get your pay," he asks quickly to which you nod yes. He beckons you closer, and you oblige. He digs around in his desk drawer for your money. As you wait, you catch a glimpse of his computer screen and see an image of a naked woman. He must think you can''t see the screen from where you are. "Here you go," Mr. Sobulyagin says as he holds out a white envelope with the money inside.'
+			'"You have missed work <<young_shop_miss>> '+iif(young_shop_miss = 1, 'time', 'times')+'," he reminds you. "Don''t make a habit out of it. If you miss work 3 times, I will fire you.'
 		elseif young_shop_miss > young_shop_warned and young_shop_miss > 0:
 			young_shop_warned = young_shop_miss
-			'He gives you a hard look when he see''s it''s you. "You missed worked, but remember what I said about missing work."'
+			'He gives you a hard look when he see''s it''s you. "You missed work. Do you remember what I said about missing work?"'
 			'You nod. "I remember. I''m sorry."'
-			'He snorts slightly and shakes his head. "You better not forget about it the next time. Here''s your pay." He beckons you closer and you oblige. He digs around in his desk drawer for your money, and as you wait, you catch a glimpse of his computer screen to see an image of a naked woman. He must think you can''t see the screen from where you are. "Here you go," Mr. Sobulyagin says as he holds out a white envelope with your money inside.'
+			'He snorts slightly and shakes his head. "You better not forget about it the next time. Here''s your pay." He beckons you closer, and you oblige. He digs around in his desk drawer for your money. As you wait, you catch a glimpse of his computer screen and see an image of a naked woman. He must think you can''t see the screen from where you are. "Here you go," Mr. Sobulyagin says as he holds out a white envelope with your money inside.'
 		end
 
 		act 'Grab the envelope and leave':
 			minut += 15
 			money += young_shop_salary * 205 + young_shop_bonus * 205
 			msg '<center>You''ve worked <b><<young_shop_salary>></b> hours and got paid <b><<young_shop_salary * 205>></b> <b>₽</b> with a bonus of <b><<young_shop_bonus * 205>></b> <b>₽</b>. Total income is <b><<young_shop_salary * 205 + young_shop_bonus * 205>></b> <b>₽</b></center>'
-			'The manager counts <b><<young_shop_salary * 205 + young_shop_bonus * 205>></b> <b>₽</b> and hands it to you. With that done he goes back to looking at the monitor of his computer.'
+			'The manager counts <b><<young_shop_salary * 205 + young_shop_bonus * 205>></b> <b>₽</b> and hands it to you. With that done, he goes back to looking at the monitor of his computer.'
 !! reset money,young_shop_salary,young_shop_bonus to zero for a new week
 			young_shop_salary = 0
 			young_shop_bonus = 0
@@ -135,7 +135,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'regular':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\manager_andrew.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
 			'"Actually, I''d like to think about this a bit more..." You say as you''re moving back towards the door. "Sorry for bothering you Mr. Sobulyagin."'
-			'He shakes his head. "It''s fine, but if there''s nothing else I''m busy right now."'
+			'He shakes his head. "It''s fine, but if there''s nothing else, I''m busy right now."'
 			act 'Leave':gt 'pussykats', 'start'
 		end
 		act 'Persist':
@@ -207,11 +207,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			'<center><img src="images/pc/tears1.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Please, I can''t lose the job! I really need the money. Please don''t fire me! I promise to do better," As you say this tears begin rolling down your cheeks.'
+			'"Please, I can''t lose the job! I really need the money. Please don''t fire me! I promise to do better," As you say this, tears begin rolling down your cheeks.'
 			*nl
-			'Mr. Sobulyagin scoffs at you, obviously, not swayed so easily by tears. He looks at you in silence with his dark eyes roaming over your body slowly as he licks his lips. "Listen, I''m not a bad guy," he says as he stands from his chair and walks to the door. "I''m willing to give you another chance, but you need to <i>show me</i> how important this job really is to you..." He cups his balls through his slacks and gives them a light squeeze.'
+			'Mr. Sobulyagin scoffs at you, obviously not swayed so easily by tears. He looks at you in silence with his dark eyes roaming over your body slowly as he licks his lips. "Listen, I''m not a bad guy," he says as he stands up from his chair and walks to the door. "I''m willing to give you another chance, but you need to <i>show me</i> how important this job really is to you..." He cups his balls through his slacks and gives them a light squeeze.'
 			*nl
-			'"Or you can leave and lose your job. It''s up to you, but those are your only options." He opens the door for you allowing you to leave and lose your job if you don''t accept his offer.'
+			'"Or you can leave and lose your job. It''s up to you, but those are your only options." He opens the door for you, allowing you to leave and lose your job if you don''t accept his offer.'
 			gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist'
 			if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 				act 'Leave (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -236,7 +236,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\fired.jpg"></center>'
 		*nl
-		'"Well look who decided to drag their ass into work today," Mr. Sobulyagin exclaims as his expression twists into a scowl as he greets you at the store entrance. "I realize coming to work is difficult for you, but do you think you can spare me a moment and come into my office," he asks dryly. You sigh and follow him as he takes you into his office then closes the door. He nods and seems to be talking to himself as much as he is talking to you. He leans against his desk and cups his crotch as he is smiling at you. "Well you know the deal if you want to keep your job."'
+		'"Well look who decided to drag their ass into work today," Mr. Sobulyagin exclaims as his expression twists into a scowl as he greets you at the store entrance. "I realize coming to work is difficult for you, but do you think you can spare me a moment and come into my office," he asks dryly. You sigh and follow him as he takes you into his office then closes the door. He nods and seems to be talking to himself as much as he is talking to you. He leans against his desk and cups his crotch as he smiles at you. "Well you know the deal if you want to keep your job."'
 		gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 			act 'Refuse and get fired (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -253,7 +253,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\fired.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'"You''re right and I''ve decided that I''m not doing you anymore favors to keep my job." Mr. Sobulyagin scowls at you, but puts his dick away. He pulls out a document from his desk drawer and begins to fill in the blanks. A few minutes later he hands you some papers and you sign them in silence.'
+				'"You''re right, and I''ve decided that I''m not doing you anymore favors to keep my job." Mr. Sobulyagin scowls at you, but puts his dick away. He pulls out a document from his desk drawer and begins to fill in the blanks. A few minutes later he hands you some papers and you sign them in silence.'
 				msg 'You are no longer employed at this store.'
 				if young_shop_salary > 0 or young_shop_bonus > 0:
 					money += young_shop_salary * 205 + young_shop_bonus * 205
@@ -280,7 +280,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 		*nl
 		'"Well look who decided to drag their ass into work today," Mr. Sobulyagin exclaims as his expression twists into a scowl as he greets you at the store entrance. "I realize coming to work is difficult for you, but do you think you can spare me a moment and come into my office," he asks dryly. You sigh and follow him as he takes you into his office then closes the door. "You are missing too much work and the other employees are noticing. I am going to need something more from you to prove your deserve to keep your job."'
 		*nl
-		'He leans against his desk and cups his crotch as he is smiling at you. "You can start off by sucking my cock then you can bend over and let me fuck you in the ass. That''s the only way you can prove to me that you still deserve to keep your job got it? If not then you''re just another lazy brat. I don''t need someone like that working for me."'
+		'He leans against his desk and cups his crotch as he smiles at you. "You can start off by sucking my cock then you can bend over and let me fuck you in the ass. That''s the only way you can prove to me that you still deserve to keep your job got it? If not, then you''re just another lazy brat. I don''t need someone like that working for me."'
+		!!this happens the first time Sveta is asked to let him fuck her ass
+		if young_shop_fired = 6:
+			*nl
+			'"That''s not fair! You know how much I need this job, so just let me give you a blowjob like usual," You say trying to convince Mr. Sobulyagin to let you keep your job without doing this.'
+			'"Listen, I''m doing you a favor here. It''s well within my rights to fire you for missing work, but I''m not a bad guy. I can see you really want this job," he says while standing up from his chair. "I''m willing to help you out, but you need to prove to me how much you want this job."'
+		end
 		gs 'willpower', 'anal', 'resist'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 			act 'Refuse (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -297,7 +303,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\fired.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'"You''re right, I''ve skipped out on work too many times and I''m not doing that anymore to keep my job." Mr. Sobulyagin scowls at you, but puts his dick away and pulls out a document from his desk drawer to begin filling in the blanks. A few minutes later he hands you some papers and you sign them without a word.'
+				'"You''re right, I''ve skipped out on work too many times, but I''m not doing that '+iif(young_shop_fired = 6, '', 'anymore ')+'to keep my job." Mr. Sobulyagin scowls at you, but puts his dick away and pulls out a document from his desk drawer to begin filling in the blanks. A few minutes later he hands you some papers and you sign them without a word.'
 				msg 'You are no longer employed at this store.'
 				if young_shop_salary > 0 or young_shop_bonus > 0:
 					money += young_shop_salary * 205 + young_shop_bonus * 205
@@ -349,7 +355,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'beg':
 		*nl
 		'"And why in the hell would I do that," Mr. Sobulyagin asks scoffingly.'
 		'"Oh please! I''ll do anything you want. I really need this job!" You say trying your absolute best to convince him.'
-		'"Anything? Ha! Fine I know what you could do," The manager exclaims as his eyes begin to wander all over your body. "You can start off by sucking my cock then bend over and let me stick my cock into your ass. That''s the only way you can prove to me you''re a hard worker got it? If not then you''re just another lazy brat and I don''t need someone like that working for me."'
+		'"Anything? Ha! Fine I know what you could do," The manager exclaims as his eyes begin to wander all over your body. "You can start off by sucking my cock then bend over and let me stick my cock into your ass. That''s the only way you can prove to me you''re a hard worker got it? If not, then you''re just another lazy brat, and I don''t need someone like that working for me."'
+		!!if it is possible Sveta never let the manager fuck her ass previous times she had this job
+		if young_shop_fired <= 6:
+			*nl
+			!!if it is possible Sveta never even gave the manager a blowjob previously
+			if young_shop_fired <= 1:
+				'"That''s not fair! You know how much I need this job, just let me give you a blowjob or something like that." You say trying to convince Mr. Sobulyagin to let you have your job back without doing this.'
+			else:
+				'"That''s not fair! You know how much I need this job, just let me give you a blowjob like usual." You say trying to convince Mr. Sobulyagin to let you have your job back without doing this.'
+			end
+			'"Listen I''m doing you a favor here. It''s well within my rights not to hire back someone who missed work, but I''m not a bad guy. I can see you really want this job," he says while standing up from his chair. "So I''m willing to help you, but you need to prove to me how much you want this job."'
+		end
 		gs 'willpower', 'anal', 'resist'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 			act 'Refuse (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -357,7 +374,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'beg':
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\fired.jpg"></center>'
 				*nl
-				'Your face immediately turns beet-red as you try to comprehend what you''ve just heard. "You want me to give you a blowjob... then have anal sex?" You don''t understand what the hell he''s thinking. "There''s no way I''ll do that!"'
+				if young_shop_fired <= 6:
+					'Your face immediately turns beet-red as you try to comprehend what you''ve just heard. "You want me to give you a blowjob... then have anal sex?" You don''t understand what the hell he''s thinking. "There''s no way I''ll do that!"'
+				else:
+					'"I know I let you do that when I worked for you before" you tell him, "but I''m not going to start doing that again.'
+				end
 				'"Fine then there''s the door," Mr. Sobulyagin snaps clearly upset with your answer.'
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pussykats', 'start'
 			end
@@ -420,7 +441,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired1':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\bj1.jpg"></center>'
-		'Falling to your knees you see he''s already unzipped his pants, pulled his cock out, and started stroking his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock. It looks enormous in your small hands as you give it a few tentative pumps before opening your mouth. You start off by gently licking the head then move on to licking the entire shaft up and down.'
+		'Falling to your knees, you see he''s already unzipped his pants, pulled his cock out, and started stroking his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock. It looks enormous in your small hands as you give it a few tentative pumps before opening your mouth. You start off by gently licking the head then move on to licking the entire shaft up and down.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 3, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':
@@ -434,7 +455,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired1':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\bj3.jpg"></center>'
-				'You soon settle into a rhythm with your eyes closing as you start to enjoy yourself a bit. Mr. Sobulyagin''s breathing quickens and you hear him moaning in pleasure. Eventually, he places his hand on the back of your head and starts forcing you to deep throat him which causes you to gag.'
+				'You soon settle into a rhythm with your eyes closing as you start to enjoy yourself a bit. Mr. Sobulyagin''s breathing quickens and you hear him moaning in pleasure. Eventually, he places his hand on the back of your head and starts forcing you to deep throat him, which causes you to gag.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 				gs 'pain', 2, 'throat', 'stretch'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -442,7 +463,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired1':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\bj4.jpg"></center>'
-					'He keeps your head deep down his cock, so that after a while your throat starts to feeling a little numb. You hear him starting to grunt. "I''m about to cum," He yells out as he removes his hand from your head and leans fully back. You pull out which makes a popping sound and set straight away with jerking him off.'
+					'He keeps your head deep down his cock for so long that your throat starts feeling a little numb. You hear him starting to grunt. "I''m about to cum," He yells out as he removes his hand from your head and leans fully back. You pull out, which makes a popping sound, and start jerking him off straight away.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'hj', 3, 'sub'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Finish':
@@ -450,7 +471,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired1':
 						*clr
 						gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', 'A101', 1
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\bj5.jpg"></center>'
-						'He starts grunting louder. "Open your mouth and stick out your tongue." You do as he commands and he takes over jerking his cock. Suddenly, he is shooting ropes of his hot cum in your mouth and all over your tongue. After a few moments, his cock stops twitching and spurting cum in your mouth. He lets go of his cock as it starts to go limp. "Now swallow." You do as you''re told and swallow his whole load.'
+						'He starts grunting louder. "Open your mouth and stick out your tongue." You do as he commands and he takes over jerking his cock. Suddenly, he is shooting ropes of his hot cum in your mouth and all over your tongue. After a few moments, his cock stops twitching and spurting cum. He lets go of his cock as it starts to go limp. "Now swallow." You do as you''re told and swallow his whole load.'
 						*nl
 						'"You did very well, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You''ve shown me how hard of a worker you are and how badly you want this job, so I''ll give you another chance." As he zips up his pants you look up to see him smiling down at you. "You''ve done enough for today, so you''re free to go home if you want. Just make sure to not miss work anymore!" With these words he walks out of the office leaving you to put yourself in order.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -475,16 +496,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired2':
 	gs 'boyStat', 'A101'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\fired.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"That''s not fair! You know how much I need this job, so just let me give you a blowjob like usual," You say trying to convince Mr. Sobulyagin to let you keep your job without doing this.'
-	'"Listen, I''m doing you a favor here. It''s well within my rights to fire you for missing work, but I''m not a bad guy. I can see you really want this job," he says while standing up from his chair. "I''m willing to help you out, but you need to prove to me how much you want this job."'
-	*nl
-	'Taking a deep breath you nod your head. "Fine...I''ll do it." You see Mr. Sobulyagin smile as places his hand on top of your head and pushes you down to your knees.'
+	'Taking a deep breath you nod your head. "Fine...I''ll do it." You see Mr. Sobulyagin smile as he places his hand on top of your head and pushes you down to your knees.'
 	act 'Get on your knees':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A101'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired1.jpg"></center>'
-		'Falling to your knees you see he''s already unzipped his pants, pulled his cock out, and started stroking his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock. It looks enormous in your small hands as you give it a few tentative pumps before opening your mouth. You start off by gently licking the head before you start sucking the head of his cock.'
+		'Falling to your knees you see he''s already unzipped his pants, pulled his cock out, and started stroking his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock. It looks enormous in your small hands as you give it a few tentative pumps before opening your mouth. You start off by gently licking the head before you start sucking.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 3, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':
@@ -492,7 +510,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired2':
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired2.jpg"></center>'
 			'After a few minutes, you put his cock in your mouth and start moving your head back and forth with your tongue constantly rolling over the head of his shaft. You feel his cock growing and stiffening as you caress it with your mouth and tongue.'
-			'You soon settle into a rhythm with your eyes closing as you start to enjoy yourself a bit. Mr. Sobulyagin''s breathing quickens and you hear him moaning in pleasure. Eventually he places his hand on the back of your head and starts forcing you to deep throat him which causes you to gag.'
+			'You soon settle into a rhythm with your eyes closing as you start to enjoy yourself a bit. Mr. Sobulyagin''s breathing quickens, and you hear him moaning in pleasure. Eventually, he places his hand on the back of your head and starts forcing you to deep throat him which causes you to gag.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 			gs 'pain', 2, 'throat', 'stretch'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -500,9 +518,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired2':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired3.jpg"></center>'
-				'"I''ve changed my mind and I can''t wait. I want your ass now, so you can clean up with your mouth after," he smirks and you feel your stomach turn slightly from the look he gives you. His hands start to roam over your body, squeezing and massaging your breasts through your top as he turns you so your back and ass is facing him. He pushes you forward making you bend over his desk. He quickly removes any clothes in the way until your bare ass is exposed to him.'
+				'"I''ve changed my mind, and I can''t wait. I want your ass now. You can clean my cock up with your mouth after," he smirks, and you feel your stomach turn slightly from the look he gives you. His hands start to roam over your body, squeezing and massaging your breasts through your top as he turns you so your back and ass are facing him. He pushes you forward, making you bend over his desk. He quickly removes any clothes in the way until your bare ass is exposed to him.'
 				*nl
-				'He gives your ass checks several hard slaps which cause you to wince in pain. "Yeah, bad little girls get their ass punished and you have been a very bad girl." You can hear the leering in his voice as he gives your bare ass another hard smack. With that done he spreads your cheeks and rams his cock up with your anus, he doesn''t even spit on your asshole, the only lubrication is the little bit of your slobber that''s left on his cock.'
+				'He gives your ass checks several hard slaps, which cause you to wince in pain. "Yeah, bad little girls get their asses punished, and you have been a very bad girl." You can hear the leering in his voice as he gives your bare ass another hard smack. With that done, he spreads your cheeks and rams his cock against your anus. He doesn''t even spit on your asshole. The only lubrication is the little bit of your slobber that''s left on his cock.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'sub', 'maso'
 				minut -= 5
@@ -513,7 +531,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired2':
 					*clr
 					gs 'boyStat', 'A101'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired4.jpg"></center>'
-					'With a hard thrust he shoves his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock deep inside you. The sudden forceful pain causes you to cry out and try to squirm away, but your hips are pressed against the edge of the desk while his hands hold your hips in place. He quickly forces his cock, balls deep into your ass, the more you cry out and resist the more he seems to like it. While he is fucking you, he reaches up and pulls your top off that leaves your breasts exposed.'
+					'With a hard thrust he shoves his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock deep inside you. The sudden forceful pain causes you to cry out and try to squirm away, but your hips are pressed against the edge of the desk while his hands hold them in place. He quickly forces his cock, balls deep into your ass, and the more you cry out and resist the more he seems to like it. While he is fucking you, he reaches up and pulls your top off, leaving your breasts exposed.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'sub', 'maso', 'rough'
 					gs 'pain', 7, 'asshole', 'stretch'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -521,7 +539,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired2':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired5.jpg"></center>'
-						'He soon settles into a hard, pounding rhythm. You are tearing up from the pain and grip the table tightly as you try and endure the pain. Your asshole already feels like it is on fire, but he doesn''t relent the slightest. He just keeps pounding your little asshole leaving you to wish he would hurry up and finish.'
+						'He soon settles into a hard, pounding rhythm. You are tearing up from the pain and grip the table tightly as you try to endure. Your asshole already feels like it is on fire, but he doesn''t relent in the slightest. He just keeps pounding your little asshole, leaving you to wish he would hurry up and finish.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'sub', 'maso', 'rough'
 						gs 'pain', 7, 'asshole', 'stretch'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -532,11 +550,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fired2':
 							gs 'cum_call', 'breasts', 'A101', 1
 							gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'A101', 1
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired6.jpg"></center>'
-							'He starts grunting louder then he, finally, pulls his cock out of your ass and you sigh in relief. He takes a step back from you. "Get on your knees and finish me off." You do as he says and turn around to drop to your knees. You take his dick in your mouth and start sucking it. You try not to think about where it just was, but at least the pain has stopped. Suddenly he pulls his cock out of your mouth and starts shooting ropes of his hot cum all over your face and tits. After a few moments, his cock stops twitching and spurting cum on you. He lets go of his cock as it begins to go limp.'
+							'He starts grunting louder then, finally, he pulls his cock out of your ass and you sigh in relief. He takes a step back from you. "Get on your knees and finish me off." You turn around and do as he says. You take his dick in your mouth and start sucking it. You try not to think about where it just was, but at least the pain has stopped. Suddenly he pulls his cock out of your mouth and starts shooting ropes of his hot cum all over your face and tits. After a few moments, his cock stops twitching and spurting cum on you. He lets go of his cock as it begins to go limp.'
 							*nl
-							'"You did very well, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You''ve shown me how badly you want this job, so I''ll give you another chance." As he zips his pants you look up to see him smiling down at you. "You''ve done enough for today, so you''re free to go home if you want. Just make sure to not miss work anymore!"'
+							'"You did very well, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You''ve shown me how badly you want this job, so I''ll give you another chance." As he zips his pants, you look up to see him smiling down at you. "You''ve done enough for today, so you''re free to go home if you want. Just make sure to not miss work anymore!"'
 							*nl
-							'You slowly stand up and your anus hurts <i>a lot</i> because it feels like someone has lit it on fire. You start to head towards the door, but he stops you. "Hey, don''t you think you should thank me for giving you another chance," he asks as he smiles smugly.'
+							'You stand up slowly because your anus hurts <i>a lot</i>, almost feeling like someone has lit it on fire. You start to head towards the door, but he stops you. "Hey, don''t you think you should thank me for giving you another chance," he asks as he smiles smugly.'
 							'"Thank you very much," You say while trying your hardest to keep a smile on your face.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -561,16 +579,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rehired':
 	gs 'boyStat', 'A101'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\fired.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"That''s not fair! You know how much I need this job, just let me give you a blowjob like usual." You say trying to convince Mr. Sobulyagin to let you keep your job without doing this.'
-	'"Listen I''m doing you a favor here. It''s well within my rights to fire you for missing work, but I''m not a bad guy. I can see you really want this job," he says while standing up from his chair. "So I''m willing to help you, but you need to prove to me how much you want this job."'
-	*nl
-	'Taking a deep breath you nod your head. "Fine... I''ll do it." You see Mr. Sobulyagin smile as places his hand on top of your head and pushes you down to your knees.'
+	'Taking a deep breath you nod your head. "Fine... I''ll do it." You see Mr. Sobulyagin smile as he places his hand on top of your head and pushes you down to your knees.'
 	act 'Get on your knees':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		gs 'boyStat', 'A101'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired1.jpg"></center>'
-		'Falling to your knees you see he''s already unzipped his pants, pulled his cock out, and started stroking his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock. It looks enormous in your small hands as you give it a few tentative pumps before opening your mouth. You start off by gently licking the head before you start sucking the head of his cock.'
+		'Falling to your knees you see he''s already unzipped his pants, pulled his cock out, and started stroking his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock. It looks enormous in your small hands as you give it a few tentative pumps before opening your mouth. You start off by gently licking the head before you start sucking.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 3, 'sub'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Continue':
@@ -578,7 +593,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rehired':
 			*clr
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired2.jpg"></center>'
 			'After a few minutes, you put his cock in your mouth and start moving your head back and forth with your tongue constantly rolling over the head of his shaft. You feel his cock growing and stiffening as you caress it with your mouth and tongue.'
-			'You soon settle into a rhythm with your eyes closing as you start to enjoy yourself a bit. Mr. Sobulyagin''s breathing quickens and you hear him moaning in pleasure. Eventually he places his hand on the back of your head and starts forcing you to deep throat him which causes you to gag.'
+			'You soon settle into a rhythm with your eyes closing as you start to enjoy yourself a bit. Mr. Sobulyagin''s breathing quickens, and you hear him moaning in pleasure. Eventually, he places his hand on the back of your head and starts forcing you to deep throat him which causes you to gag.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 			gs 'pain', 2, 'throat', 'stretch'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -586,9 +601,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rehired':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired3.jpg"></center>'
-				'"I''ve changed my mind and I can''t wait. I want your ass now which you can clean up with your mouth after," he smirks and you feel your stomach turn slightly from the look he gives you. His hands start to roam over your body, squeezing and massaging your breasts through your top, as he turns you so your back and ass is facing him. He pushes you forward making you bend over his desk. He quickly removes any clothes in the way until your bare ass is exposed to him.'
+				'"I''ve changed my mind, and I can''t wait. I want your ass now. You can clean my cock up with your mouth after," he smirks, and you feel your stomach turn slightly from the look he gives you. His hands start to roam over your body, squeezing and massaging your breasts through your top, as he turns you so your back and ass are facing him. He pushes you forward, making you bend over his desk. He quickly removes any clothes in the way until your bare ass is exposed to him.'
 				*nl
-				'He gives your ass checks several hard slaps which cause you to wince in pain. "Yeah, bad little girls get their ass punished and you have been a very bad girl." You can hear the leering in his voice as he gives your bare ass another hard smack. With that he spreads your cheeks and rams his cock up with your anus, he doesn''t even spit on your asshole, the only lubrication is the little bit of your slobber that''s left on his cock.'
+				'He gives your ass checks several hard slaps, which cause you to wince in pain. "Yeah, bad little girls get their asses punished and you have been a very bad girl." You can hear the leering in his voice as he gives your bare ass another hard smack. With that, he spreads your cheeks and rams his cock against your anus. He doesn''t even spit on your asshole. The only lubrication is the little bit of your slobber that''s left on his cock.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'deepthroat'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'sub', 'maso'
 				minut -= 5
@@ -599,7 +614,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rehired':
 					*clr
 					gs 'boyStat', 'A101'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired4.jpg"></center>'
-					'With a hard thrust he shoves his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock deep inside you. The sudden forceful pain causes you to cry out and try to squirm away, but your hips are pressed against the edge of the desk while his hands hold your hips in place. He quickly forces his cock, balls deep into your ass, the more you cry out and resist the more he seems to like it. While he is fucking you. He reaches up and pulls your top off to leave your breasts exposed.'
+					'With a hard thrust he shoves his <<dick>> cm <<$dick_girth>> cock deep inside you. The sudden forceful pain causes you to cry out and try to squirm away, but your hips are pressed against the edge of the desk while his hands hold them in place. He quickly forces his cock, balls deep into your ass, and the more you cry out and resist the more he seems to like it. While he is fucking you, he reaches up and pulls your top off, leaving your breasts exposed.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'sub', 'maso', 'rough'
 					gs 'pain', 7, 'asshole', 'stretch'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -607,7 +622,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rehired':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired5.jpg"></center>'
-						'He soon settles into a hard, pounding rhythm. You are tearing up from the pain and grip the table tightly while you try and endure the pain. Your asshole already feels like it is on fire, but he doesn''t relent the slightest. He just keeps pounding your little asshole leaving you to wish he would hurry up and finish.'
+						'He soon settles into a hard, pounding rhythm. You are tearing up from the pain and grip the table tightly while you try to endure. Your asshole already feels like it is on fire, but he doesn''t relent in the slightest. He just keeps pounding your little asshole, leaving you to wish he would hurry up and finish.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'sub', 'maso', 'rough'
 						gs 'pain', 7, 'asshole', 'stretch'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -618,11 +633,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rehired':
 							gs 'cum_call', 'breasts', 'A101', 1
 							gs 'cum_call', 'face', 'A101', 1
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\city\citycenter\mall\cats\sex\fired6.jpg"></center>'
-							'He starts grunting louder, finally, he pulls his cock out of your ass and you sigh in relief. He takes a step back from you. "Get on your knees and finish me off." You do as he says and turn around to drop to your knees. You take his dick in your mouth and start sucking it. You try not to think about where it just was, but at least the pain has stopped. Suddenly, he pulls his cock out of your mouth and starts shooting ropes of his hot cum all over your face and tits. After a few moments, his cock stops twitching and spurting cum on you. He lets go of his cock as it begins to go limp.'
+							'He starts grunting louder then, finally, he pulls his cock out of your ass, and you sigh in relief. He takes a step back from you. "Get on your knees and finish me off." You turn around and do as he says. You take his dick in your mouth and start sucking it. You try not to think about where it just was, but at least the pain has stopped. Suddenly, he pulls his cock out of your mouth and starts shooting ropes of his hot cum all over your face and tits. After a few moments, his cock stops twitching and spurting cum on you. He lets go of his cock as it begins to go limp.'
 							*nl
 							'"You did very well, <<$pcs_nickname>>! You''ve shown me how badly you want this job, so I''ll give you another chance." As he zips his pants, you look up to see him smiling down at you. "You''ve done enough for today, so you''re free to go home if you want. Just make sure to not miss work anymore!"'
 							*nl
-							'You slowly stand up, your anus hurts <i>a lot</i>, it feels like someone has lit it on fire. You start to head towards the door, but he stops you. "Hey, don''t you think you should thank me for giving you another chance," he asks, smiling smugly.'
+							'You stand up slowly because your anus hurts <i>a lot</i>, almost feeling like someone has lit it on fire. You start to head towards the door, but he stops you. "Hey, don''t you think you should thank me for giving you another chance," he asks, smiling smugly.'
 							'"Thank you very much," You say trying your hardest to keep a smile on your face.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'

locations/anekdot.qsrc

@@ -5,12 +5,12 @@ if anrand = 0:
 	'What is the difference between a snowman and a snow-woman?'
 	'Snowballs.'
 elseif anrand = 1:
-	'Somewhere in the Atlantic Ocean two submarines, Russian and American, come to the surface.'
+	'Somewhere in the Atlantic Ocean, two submarines, Russian and American, come to the surface.'
 	'The Russian one is old and rusty while the American one is new and sleek matte black.'
 	'On the Soviet one, the crew lounges about lazily and a drunken captain yells at them, "Who threw a valenok on the control board? I''m asking you who threw a valenok on the control board?!"'
 	'From the American submarine, a clean-shaven, sober, and smartly-dressed captain yells scornfully, "You know, folks, in America..."'
 	'The Russian captain dismissively interrupts him, "America??! Ain''t no fucking America no more!!"'
-	'[He turns back to his crew] "For the last time who threw a valenok on the control board?!"'
+	'[He turns back to his crew] "For the last time, who threw a valenok on the control board?!"'
 elseif anrand = 2:
 	'Two old men on a bench in a nursing home.'
 	'One says, "My grandson asked me yesterday what I did during the sexual revolution."'
@@ -30,9 +30,9 @@ elseif anrand = 6:
 elseif anrand = 7:
 	'I''m selling my parrot. Why you ask? Because yesterday the bastard tried to sell me.'
 elseif anrand = 8:
-	'They threw me out of the cinema the other day for bringing my own food. Come on though, the prices are way too high and it''s been ages since I had a barbecue.'
+	'They threw me out of the cinema the other day for bringing my own food. Come on though, the prices are way too high, and it''s been ages since I had a barbecue.'
 elseif anrand = 9:
-	'I went to the zoo the other day, but they only had a dog on display. It was a shitzu.'
+	'I went to the zoo the other day, but they only had a dog on display. It was a shih tzu.'
 elseif anrand = 10:
 	'An optimist sees light at the end of a tunnel and thinks it''s an exit'
 	'A pessimist sees light at the end of a tunnel and thinks it''s an oncoming train'
@@ -48,9 +48,9 @@ elseif anrand = 14:
 	'Light travels faster than sound.'
 	'That''s why a lot of people look smart until they start talking.'
 elseif anrand = 15:
-	'Stalking: When a couple enjoys long romantic walks with each other, but only one them is aware of that fact.'
+	'Stalking: when a couple enjoys long romantic walks with each other, but only one them is aware of that fact.'
 elseif anrand = 16:
-	'When a guy says he likes girls with a sense of humour that doesn''t mean he wants a girl to be witty and funny'
+	'When a guy says he likes girls with a sense of humour, that doesn''t mean he wants a girl to be witty and funny'
 	'He just wants someone to finally laugh at his jokes.'
 elseif anrand = 17:
 	'I never understood why "bra" is singular and "panties" are plural'
@@ -73,28 +73,28 @@ elseif anrand = 21:
 	'The Chukcha replies, "South-South-East bearing 159.5 degrees!"'
 	'"Don''t be a smart-ass", says the captain, "just point your finger!'
 elseif anrand = 22:
-	'I have the heart of a lion and lifetime ban from the zoo.'
+	'I have the heart of a lion and a lifetime ban from the zoo.'
 elseif anrand = 23:
 	'I want to die peacefully in my sleep like my grandfather'
 	'Not screaming in terror like his bus passengers.'
 elseif anrand = 24:
-	'Give a man a fire and he''s warm for a day'
-	'Set him on fire and he''s warm for the rest of his life.'
+	'Give a man a fire, and he''s warm for a day'
+	'Set him on fire, and he''s warm for the rest of his life.'
 elseif anrand = 25:
 	'Father says, "Son, you were adopted"'
 	'Son replies, "What? I knew it! I want to meet my biological parents!"'
 	'Father retorts, "We are your biological parents. Now pack up, because they''ll be here to pick you up in 20 minutes."'
 elseif anrand = 26:
-	'When I was younger I felt like a man trapped in a woman''s body.'
+	'When I was younger, I felt like a man trapped in a woman''s body.'
 	'Then I was born'
 elseif anrand = 27:
-	'I was raised as an only child which really annoyed my sister.'
+	'I was raised as an only child, which really annoyed my sister.'
 elseif anrand = 28:
 	'Father says, "Son, I don''t think you''re cut out to be a mime"'
 	'Son retorts, "Why? Was it something I said?"'
 elseif anrand = 29:
-	'My sister had a baby that they took a while to name her'
-	'I told her to name her soon before she turns into a criminal'
+	'My sister had a baby that they took a while to name'
+	'I told her to name her soon before she turned into a criminal'
 	'I''m not having my niece on the news like all those other 17 year old criminals who have yet to be named.'
 elseif anrand = 30:
 	'I went into a shop for a book about turtles'
@@ -113,9 +113,9 @@ elseif anrand = 34:
 	'The best time to add insult to injury is when you''re signing the cast.'
 elseif anrand = 35:
 	'I wrote a letter to the post office about my mail being stolen'
-	'To make sure they read it I put it inside a birthday card.'
+	'To make sure they read it, I put it inside a birthday card.'
 elseif anrand = 36:
-	'I''m sure wherever my father is that he''s looking down on us'
+	'I''m sure, wherever my father, is that he''s looking down on us'
 	'He''s not dead. He''s just very condescending.'
 elseif anrand = 37:
 	'My father is a family man'

locations/anushaptbr.qsrc

@@ -10,7 +10,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anushka''s brother''s room</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'The room is disorganized and untidy. It is fairly messy with a lot of clothes scattered about in varies piles. Two beds are crammed into the room with them parallel along the walls that leaves an open space in the center. There is a small TV on a stand in the room with a Playstation console laying partially hidden under some clothes that are in front of it.'
+	'The room is disorganized and untidy. It is fairly messy with a lot of clothes scattered about in various piles. Two beds are crammed against opposite walls, leaving an open space in the center. There is a small TV on a stand in the room with a PlayStation console lying partially hidden under some clothes in front of it.'
 	
 	act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 	
@@ -19,25 +19,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 		menu_off = 1
 		minut += 5
 		gs 'stat'
-		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing and look towards you in fear and anger. The older brother is maybe a 13 or 14, just at that age when boys start paying attention to girls. Her younger brother is about a year or two younger.'
-		'The older brother gathers some courage, "What do you want? Get out of our room!"'
+		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing and look towards you in fear and anger. Maksim, the older brother, is maybe 13 or 14, just at that age when boys start paying attention to girls. Timofey, the younger brother, is about a year or two younger.'
+		'Maksim gathers some courage, "What do you want? Get out of our room!"'
 		*nl
 		'Anushka quickly replies, "Calm down. I just wanted to see what you were up to ''cause I know you little shitheads are always up to something."'
 		'"What do you care what we do? Shouldn''t you be off with your band or sucking some cock?"'
-		'Anushka reaches out and slaps him on the back of the head. "Watch what you say or I''ll beat your little ass."'
+		'Anushka reaches out and slaps him on the back of the head. "Watch what you say, or I''ll beat your little ass."'
 		*nl
 		'He rubs the back of his head. "That''s what mother always says."'
 		'Anushka fumes a bit. "Fuck that bitch and don''t listen to her. You better listen to dad you little asshole."'
-		'He just rolls his eyes and ignores her to look at you now. "Don''t tell me... is this one of the famous groupies that we''ve heard so many stories about?"'
+		'He just rolls his eyes and ignores her. Looking at you now, he says, "Don''t tell me... is this one of the famous groupies that we''ve heard so many stories about?"'
 		act 'Excuse me?':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anushka''s brother''s room</font></b></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-			'"What do you mean," you ask.'
-			'"We heard a lot of great stories about the band and the groupies from Radomir," Maksim answers.'
-			'"Don''t listen to what he says. He''s just making up most of that stuff to impress you," answers an irritated Anushka.'
+			'"What do you mean?" you ask.'
+			'"We heard a lot of great stories about the band and its groupies from Radomir," Maksim answers.'
+			'"Don''t listen to what he says. He''s just making up most of that stuff to impress you," snaps an irritated Anushka.'
 			'"Well, at least we can hope this groupie is better than Alyona."'
 			act 'Why''s that?':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -45,11 +45,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anushka''s brother''s room</font></b></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Well, she''s really mean to us. She always beats me up and won''t play games with us," the old brother says as he looks at you sadly. The younger one nods in agreement.'
-				'"If you weren''t trying to film her while she is taking a shower, maybe she wouldn''t be kicking your ass, you little pervert," Anushka answers.'
+				'"Well, she''s really mean to us. She always beats me up and won''t play games with us," Maksim says as he looks at you sadly. Timofey nods in agreement.'
+				'"If you would stop trying to film her while she is taking a shower, maybe she wouldn''t be kicking your ass, you little pervert," Anushka interjects.'
 				'"Your brothers are really something else. I guess even boys at this age think with their smaller head," you say.'
 				*nl
-				'Anushka nods in agreement, "Yeah, most of them are slaves to their lust even if these are too young to even understand it yet."'
+				'Anushka nods in agreement, "Yeah, most of them are slaves to their lust even if they are too young to even understand it yet."'
 				'Maksim puffs up. "I''m not too young."'
 				'Anushka laughs at him and turns to you, "Maybe I should tell my dad what they''re up to."'
 				act 'Laugh':
@@ -57,22 +57,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 					'The brothers are looking at the two of you in total fear. Anushka continues on, "Look at them! They''re scared shitless."'
 					'Maksim is fuming with anger and starts yelling, "Get out of our room!"'
-					'You and Anushka keep on laughing while the brothers are pushing you out of their room.'
+					'When you and Anushka just keep on laughing, he and Timofey get up and push you out the door.'
 					act 'Leave':AnushkaLoc=2&gt'anushapt','hallway'
 				end
 			end
 		end
-	elseif AnushkaLoc = 3 and (maksimQW = 1 or maksimQW = 2):
+	elseif AnushkaLoc = 3 and maksimQW = 1:
 		if maksimQW = 1: maksimQW = 2
 		menu_off = 1
 		minut += 3
 		gs 'stat'
-		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing. The older one gathers some courage, "What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie with you again."'
-		'Anushka quickly replies, "Calm down. I just wanted to see if you were up for a match." She indicates by pointing to the gaming console in their room.'
+		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing. Maksim, the older one, gathers some courage, "What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie with you again."'
+		'"Calm down. I just wanted to see if you were up for a match." Anushka quickly replies, pointing to the gaming console in their room.'
 		'Maksim glances at his brother a moment then back to Anushka. "All of us?"'
 		*nl
 		'She nods. "That''s the plan. The two of us against the two of you."'
-		'Both of them get excited at that. "You''re friend better be great. We''ve been practicing really hard and we''ll definitely beat you this time."'
+		'Both of them get excited at that. "You''re friend better be great. We''ve been practicing really hard, and we''ll definitely beat you this time."'
 		'Anushka quickly replies smiling, "You really think you can beat me this time? You got your asses handed to you the last time."'
 		'The boys nod at each other, "This time will be different. We''re sure we will win."'
 		act 'What''s this all about?':
@@ -80,7 +80,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Oh don''t worry. Sometimes I sit and play video games with them. I always beat their ass."'
+			'"Oh don''t worry. Sometimes I sit and play video games with them. I always beat their asses."'
 			'"Not this time!" Maksim looks at the two of you determined.'
 			act 'Sit down and play':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -99,34 +99,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 					if pcs_gaming <= 20:
 						'The game is pretty much over. Both of them are better players than you are. Anushka does what she can, but the brothers fairly easily manage to win back to back matches. Both brothers jump up and do some weird little victory dance. "Ha ha we win and you lose," Maksim taunts.'
 						'Anushka rolls her eyes at their antics. "You just got lucky is all."'
-						'"You suck, you suck," Maksim chants and Timofey quickly joins in. "Losers, losers!"'
-						'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on lets go. They''re not going to stop acting like jackasses anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
+						'"You suck, you suck," Maksim chants, and Timofey quickly joins in. "Losers, losers!"'
+						'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on let''s go. They''re not going to stop acting like jackasses anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
 					elseif pcs_gaming <= 40:
-						'The game is pretty much a draw with no team getting the upper hand. All of a sudden you make a mistake and the brothers are about to win. Just as they''re about to grab their victory, Anushka uses her foot to push Maksim off the bed. This allows her to secure the win while he is trying to recover.'
+						'You start to get a handle on things, and for a while, the game is pretty much a draw with no team getting the upper hand. All of a sudden however, you make a mistake, and the brothers are about to win. Just as they''re about to grab their victory though, Anushka uses her foot to push Maksim off the bed. This allows her to secure the win while he is trying to recover.'
 						'He begins to yell, "Not fair... you''re cheating. You always do this when you''re about to lose." The younger one joins in, "Anushka''s a cheater."'
-						'"Don''t be such a crybaby I thought you said you were prepared this time," she says teasing him, but with a smile on her face despite her brother looking mad.'
+						'"Don''t be such a crybaby. I thought you said you were prepared this time," she says teasing them with a smile on her face.'
 						*nl
-						'The comment only makes the situation worse and things escalate. The brothers are now yelling at Anushka and obviously taking it way too serious. After a bit, Anushka gets fed up with them and starts yelling back.'
-						'All of a sudden, the door opens and their dad is standing there. He bellows at everyone, "Knock it off!" Anushka and the older of her two brothers shut up at once. They obviously know better than to test their dad.'
+						'The comment only makes the situation worse, and things escalate. The brothers are now yelling at Anushka and obviously taking it way too seriously. After a bit, Anushka gets fed up with them and starts yelling back.'
+						'All of a sudden, the door opens, and their dad, Eduard, is standing there. He bellows at everyone, "Knock it off!" Anushka and the Maksim shut up at once. They obviously know better than to test their dad.'
 						'"But dad! She cheated again," Timofey pleads with him.'
-						'"But dad nothing. Weren''t you supposed to be studying," Eduard asks.'
+						'"But dad nothing. Weren''t you supposed to be studying?" Eduard asks.'
 						*nl
-						'"Y-Yes...," both of them answer. "Well get to i,t" He says to them then turns to Anushka and you. "You two get out of their room. Nush stop tormenting your brothers," he says as he holds the door open ''til you both leave then he pulls it shut hard.'
-						'Anushka starts to respond, "I wasn''t...," but her dad interrupts her. "I don''t care. You leave them alone, so they can study. Take your friend to your room." With that he turns and goes back to the living room while Anushka and you go back to her room.'
+						'"Y-Yes...," both brothers answer. "Well get to it" He says to them then turns to Anushka and you. "You two get out of their room. Nush stop tormenting your brothers," he says. He holds the door open till you both leave then he pulls it shut hard.'
+						'Anushka starts to respond, "I wasn''t...," but her dad interrupts her. "I don''t care. You leave them alone so they can study. Take your friend to your room." With that, he turns and goes back to the living room.'
 					else
-						'The game is pretty much over you. Anushka and you are able to win, not by a lot, but enough that the brothers come close. They fall a little short in both matches.'
+						'While it''s your first time playing, you manage to hold your own, and with Anushka''s skill, it becomes clear you two have the upper hand. The brothers keep it close, but they fall a little short in both matches.'
 						'Maksim throws down his controller and turns on Timofey. "Why are you so bad? We could have beat them if you didn''t suck so much."'
-						'Timofey tries to defend himself, "It''s not my fault ''cause Nush is just to good."'
-						'Before Maksim can respond Anushka cuts him off, "It''s not Timos fault. I killed you three times when you kept trying to go through that courtyard. Your just mad cause you got beat by a girl... again," she says teasingly and sticks her tongue out at him.'
-						'Maksim eyes flare at Anushka. "GO SUCK A DICK SLUT ''CAUSE THATS ALL YOU ARE GOOD AT," he screams at her.'
-						'Anushka eyes narrow. "Watch your mouth you little shit since it''s just a game."'
-						'Before anyone can say more, the door suddenly opens and their dad is standing there. He bellows, "Knock it off!" In response everyone shuts up.'
+						'Timofey tries to defend himself, "It''s not my fault ''cause Nush is just too good."'
+						'Before Maksim can respond, Anushka cuts him off, "It''s not Timos fault. I killed you three times when you kept trying to go through that courtyard. You''re just mad cause you got beat by a girl... again," she says teasingly and sticks her tongue out at him.'
+						'Maksim''s eyes flare at Anushka. "GO SUCK A DICK SLUT ''CAUSE THATS ALL YOU ARE GOOD AT," he screams at her.'
+						'Anushka''s eyes narrow. "Watch your mouth you little shit. It''s just a game."'
+						'Before anyone can say more, the door suddenly opens and their dad, Eduard, is standing there. He bellows, "Knock it off!" In response, everyone shuts up.'
 						'He looks at Maksim. "Did I just hear you call your sister a slut and tell her to suck a dick?" His voice is low and full of anger. Maksim visibly shrinks under his dad''s gaze.'
 						'"She was teasing me." He weakly tries to defend himself, obviously knowing he is in trouble.'
-						'He turns and glares at Anushka. "Stop teasing your brothers and go to you room." When she starts to open her mouth he cuts her off, "I don''t want to hear it, go to your room." With that she gets up in a huff to head back to her room.'
-						'As you leave and just before the door closes you hear Ed say to Maksi,. "What have I told you about calling your sister a slut?"'
-						'Maksim voices cracks, "I''m sorry."'
-						'The door closes before you can hear any more, so now you just hear the muffled sounds emitting from behind the door.'
+						'Eduard turns and glares at Anushka. "Stop teasing your brothers and go to you room." When she starts to open her mouth, he cuts her off, "I don''t want to hear it. Go to your room." With that, she gets up in a huff and does as she''s told. You follow behind her.'
+						'As you leave, you hear Ed say to Maksim. "What have I told you about calling your sister a slut?"'
+						'Maksim''s voices cracks, "I''m sorry."'
+						'The door closes before you can hear any more, leaving you unable to make out anything beyond muffled sounds.'
 					end
 					act 'Go to Anushka''s room':AnushkaLoc=2&gt'anushapt','anushroom'
 				end	
@@ -135,62 +135,64 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 	elseif AnushkaLoc ! 3:
 		brotherroom = rand(1,6)
 		menu_off = 1
-		if brotherroom = 1:
+		if brotherroom = 1 and maksimQW >= 3:
+			if maksimQW = 3: maksimQW = 4
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see the boys sitting there talking about something. The older brother is maybe a 13 or 14, just at that age when boys start paying attention to girls. Her younger brother is about a year or two younger.'
+			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see the boys sitting there talking about something. Maksim, the older brother, is maybe 13 or 14, just at that age when boys start paying attention to girls. Timofey, the younger brother, is about a year or two younger.'
 			act 'What are you up to?':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/brothers.jpg"></center>'
 				'"Nothing much really. We were just discussing what kind of band we were going to have when we get older," Maksim responds.'
-				'"Oh? So you want to be like your big sister and be in a band too," you ask them.'
+				'"Oh? So you want to be like your big sister and be in a band too?" you ask them.'
 				'Maksim shakes his head. "I don''t want to be like her, but I do want to be like Radomir. I want to be the band leader and get all the bitches for free. He''s the best."'
-				'Before you can respond Timofey cuts in, "Arkadi is the best or maybe Valentin, ''cause they give us stuff."'
+				'Before you can respond, Timofey cuts in, "Arkadi is the best or maybe Valentin, ''cause they give us stuff."'
 				act 'What does Valentin give you?':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 2
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-					'"He''s pretty cool and he gives us his old video games sometimes. He also has a bike like dad and spends a lot of time with him," Timofey answers.'
-					'"Does he ever let you sit on his bike," you ask.'
+					'"He''s pretty cool, and he gives us his old video games sometimes. He also has a bike like dad and spends a lot of time with him," Timofey answers.'
+					'"Does he ever let you sit on his bike?" you ask.'
 					'"Yeah, he lets us ride with him sometimes. It''s so awesome," says Timofey.'
-					'Maksim says, "However, at the same time he doesn''t let us drink..."'
+					'Maksim says, "However at the same time, he doesn''t let us drink..."'
 					act 'Who lets you drink?':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 2
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 						'"Arkadi," they both shout. "Just don''t tell our dad because he will get mad."'
-						'"Don''t worry I won''t tell your dad." you reassure them.'
+						'"Don''t worry. I won''t tell your dad." you reassure them.'
 						act 'What about Radomir?':
 							*clr & cla
 							minut += 2
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 							'"He''s pretty cool. I want to be like him when I grow up," Maksim confidently says.'
-							'"Because he''s a good musician," you ask.'
+							'"Because he''s a good musician?" you ask.'
 							'"No, because he''s a pussy magnet! He can get any girl he wants," Maksim answers while giving you his best seductive grin. It''s laughable at best.'
 							*nl
-							'"That was way too much information for me. I think it''s time for me to head out. I''m feeling a bit nauseous."'
-							'With a disappointed look on his face Maksim turns to his brother as you are walking out which you overhear him say, "Bitches are a ruble a dozen just like Radomir says." Just as you close the door you hear the little brother agreeing. It''s very likely that he has no idea to what he is agreeing to.'
+							'"That was way too much information for me. I think it''s time for me to head out. I''m feeling a bit nauseous." You see a disappointed look on Maksim''s face.'
+							'As you are walking out, Maksim turns to his brother, and you hear him say, "Bitches are a ruble a dozen just like Radomir says." As you close the door, you hear Timofey agreeing. It''s very likely that he has no idea to what he is agreeing to.'
 							act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 						end
 					end	
 				end
 			end	
-		elseif brotherroom = 2:
+		elseif brotherroom = 2 and maksimQW >= 4:
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see the two brothers fighting on the bed. They immediately stop as they see you.'
+			if maksimQW = 4: maksimQW = 5
+			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see the two brothers fighting on Maksim''s bed. They immediately stop when they see you.'
 			act 'What are you doing?':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/browrestle.jpg"></center>'
-				'"What are you boys up too?" You ask them.'
-				'Maksim blushes while looking at you, "N-Nothing... g-get out of our room."'
-				'You look around the bed and find a porn magazine laying on it.'
+				'"What are you boys up to?" You ask them.'
+				'Maksim blushes, "N-Nothing... g-get out of our room."'
+				'You walk over to his bed and find a porn magazine lying on it.'
 				'Timofey starts teasing him, "Ha-ha... you got caught by one of Anushka''s friends looking at the magazine."'
 				'"Shut up. You''re just a little kid, so what do you know..."'
 				act 'Grab the magazine':
@@ -199,7 +201,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 					'You walk up to them and grab the magazine. Maksim tries his hardest to stop you, but you easily manage to push him away.'
-					'"Give it back, because it''s mine," Maksim says dejected. "It''s all your fault," he says as he turns to his brother. "If you could only keep your mouth shut. I can''t wait to get my own room."'
+					'"Give that back. It''s mine," Maksim says dejected. "It''s all your fault," he says as he turns to his brother. "If you could only keep your mouth shut. I can''t wait to get my own room."'
 					'Timofey just keeps on sneering at his brother.'
 					act 'Calm down':
 						*clr & cla
@@ -207,25 +209,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 						'"It doesn''t have to be all bad," you say. "I share a room with my sister."'
-						'"Wow, two girls in one room... that is so hot," says Maksim. "Our sister is the only one with her own room, that''s so unfair."'
+						'"Wow, two girls in one room... that is so hot," says Maksim. "Our sister is the only one with her own room. That''s so unfair."'
 						'"She is a girl after all. Wouldn''t it be awkward if she shared a room with you," you try to explain.'
-						'"I guess... but she could sleep in the living room then we could each have our own room," he says as if that was totally fair.'
-						'You look through the magazine and the boy has some kinky tastes. You wonder who might have bought it for him, so you throw the magazine back onto the bed saying, "I won''t tell anyone your secret, but try to be nice to each other at least."'
+						'"I guess... but she could sleep in the living room then we could each have our own room," he says as if that would be totally fair.'
+						'Giving up on reasoning with him, you shrug and turn to the magazine. As you flip through the pages, you realize the boy has some kinky tastes and wonder who might have bought something like this for him. However whoever it was, you figure there''s no harm in him looking at pictures, so when you reach the end, you throw the magazine back onto his bed saying, "I won''t tell anyone your secret, but try to be nice to each other at least."'
 						act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 					end
 				end	
 			end
-		elseif brotherroom = 3 and maksimQW = 2:
+		elseif brotherroom = 3 and maksimQW >= 2:
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see Maksim in there alone playing some first person shooter on the play station.'
+			if maksimQW = 2: maksimQW = 3
+			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see Maksim in there alone playing some first person shooter on the PlayStation.'
 			act 'Ask where Timofey is':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksim.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Where''s your brother," You ask him.'
-				'Maksim gives you a annoyed look. "Why do you care? He is likely outside playing in the dirt like a stupid kid."'
-				'You smile at that and ask, "Why arn''t you playing with him?"'
+				'"Where''s your brother?" You ask him.'
+				'Maksim gives you an annoyed look. "Why do you care? He is likely outside playing in the dirt like a stupid kid."'
+				'You smile at that and ask, "Why aren''t you playing with him?"'
 				'"I''m not a little kid ''cause I''m practically a grown man," he tells you.'
 				act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 				act 'Ask if he wants to play':
@@ -235,9 +238,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 					'You nod at that while trying not to smile. "Oh I see, so do you want to play a game with me then?"'
 					if pcs_gaming <= 40:
-						'It looks like he is about to say no, but then he smiles. "Ok, but only if we make interesting."'
-						'"Interesting how," You ask him.'
-						'He grins. "If I win you have to show me your boobs, but if you win I will tell you a secret about Nush that you don''t know."'
+						'It looks like he is about to say no, but then he smiles. "Ok, but only if we make it interesting."'
+						'"Interesting how?" You ask him.'
+						'He grins. "If I win, you have to show me your boobs, but if you win, I will tell you a secret about Nush that you don''t know."'
 						act 'No, I don''t think so':
 							*clr & cla
 							minut += 3
@@ -255,7 +258,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 							gaming_exp =+ rand(1,3)
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksimplay.jpg"></center>'
-							'The two of you start playing, but it quickly becomes obvious he has played this game a lot and is very good at it. You try, but you are just unable to keep up with him. A couple of times you come close to matching him. However, oftentimes you are just outmatched. After a couple of matches, he pauses the game and looks at you with a lustful grin. "Ha Ha you lost, so now show me your boobs."'
+							'The two of you start playing, and it quickly becomes obvious he has played this game a lot and is very good at it. You try, but you are just unable to keep up with him. A couple of times you come close to matching him. However, oftentimes you are just outmatched. After a couple of matches, he pauses the game and looks at you with a lustful grin. "Ha Ha you lost, so now show me your boobs."'
 							gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist'
 							if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:	
 								act 'Refuse to show him your boobs (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -263,11 +266,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 									gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
-									'You shake your head. "No, I don''t think so. You''re to young anyways."'
+									'You shake your head. "No, I don''t think so. You''re too young anyways."'
 									'His eyes flash because he is obviously furious with you. "You promised!"'
 									'You shrug. "I lied."'
 									'"GET OUT! Get out of my room," he yells at you.'
-									'By not wanting anyone to come find out what is going on you quickly get up and leave.'
+									'Not wanting anyone to come find out what is going on, you quickly get up and leave.'
 									act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 								end
 							else
@@ -279,10 +282,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 								gs 'exhibitionism', 1
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksimshow.jpg"></center>'
-								'Well, you did agree and he did win. You stand up then pull your top up to expose your breasts to him. His eyes get huge as he stares at your tits. Before either of you can say anything you hear the front door slam. Timofey is yelling as he''s running down the hall. "Maksim... Maksim... come see... come see."'
+								'Well, you did agree, and he did win. You stand up then pull your top up to expose your breasts to him. His eyes get huge as he stares at your tits. Before either of you can say anything, you hear the front door slam. "Maksim... Maksim... come see... come see." Timofey yells as he runs down the hall.'
 								*nl
-								'You pull your top back into place just before he bursts in the room. Maksim gives him a dirty look. "Why do you have to always ruin everything?"'
-								'Timofey stops obviously not understanding what is going on. He looks between the two of you completely confused. "I just wanted to show you something." You use that time to slip out of the room and close the door behind you. You leave the two of them behind to argue.'
+								'You pull your top back into place just before he bursts into the room. Maksim gives him a dirty look. "Why do you always have to ruin everything?"'
+								'Timofey stops, obviously not understanding what is going on. He looks between the two of you completely confused. "I just wanted to show you something." You use this as an opportunity to slip out of the room and close the door behind you, leaving the two of them behind to argue.'
 								act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 							end
 						end
@@ -295,7 +298,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 							gaming_exp =+ rand(1,3)
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/maksimplay.jpg"></center>'
-							'You play a game with him. He is pretty good, but you are better and you manage to beat him. Maksim just isn''t good enough to beat you. After a bit, he seems to get annoyed by the fact he keeps losing and switches games. "I''m bored with this game." He switches to a single player game. You smile knowing he only switched games because he couldn''t win.'
+							'You play a game with him. He is pretty good, but not good enough to beat you. After a bit, he seems to get annoyed by the fact he keeps losing. "I''m bored with this game" he declares, turning it off and pulling out a single player one. You smile, knowing he only switched games because he couldn''t win.'
 							act 'Leave':gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 						end
 					end
@@ -303,7 +306,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brotherroom':
 			end
 		else
 			'You open the door and look in the brothers'' room. You see Maksim and Timofey are here. They do whatever it is that boys do. Maksim stares at your tits for a couple of moments before saying, "Get lost."'
-			'Timofey looks over and adds, "Yeah get lost, ''cause no girls allowed." After that they just ignore you.'
+			'Timofey looks over and adds, "Yeah get lost, ''cause no girls allowed." After that, they just ignore you.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'anushapt', 'hallway'
 		end
 		killvar 'brotherroom'
@@ -321,7 +324,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rematch':
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Anushka''s brother''s room</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/broroom.jpg"></center>'
 	if rand(1,2) = 1:
-		'The two of you enter her brothers room. They immediately stop doing whatever they were doing. The older one gathers some courage, "What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie with you again."'
+		'The two of you enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing whatever they were doing. Maksim gathers some courage, "What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie with you again."'
 		'Anushka quickly replies, "I just wanted to see if you were up for a rematch." She points to the gaming console in their room.'
 		'Maksim glances at his brother a moment then back to Anushka. "Ok... fine."'
 		*nl
@@ -336,7 +339,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rematch':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/playgamebro.jpg"></center>'
 			'The brothers turn away from you and start whispering. You''re sure that they must be planning something.'
 			'"Let''s play." Timofey says smiling.'
-			'The four of you are playing for several minutes and you don''t really know what''s happening. It appears to be some shooter game that you have never played before, but Anushka does her best to explain it as you play.'
+			'The four of you play for several minutes. It''s the same shooter game as last time, and you''re a little bit better than before.'
 			act 'Finish':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 15
@@ -347,42 +350,42 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rematch':
 					'Anushka rolls her eyes at their antics. "Yeah... yeah... yeah... you won." She reaches over and ruffles Timofey''s hair which he tries and fails to dodge. "Good job kiddo."'
 					'"Pfft I won it. Timo almost caused us to lose if I didn''t carry his sorry ass," Maksim says.'
 					'Timofey pulls away from his sister. "Nuh-uh, I almost scored as good you as you did!" Which quickly turns into them arguing over who did better.'
-					'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on lets go. They''re not going to stop acting like brat''s anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
+					'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on let''s go. They''re not going to stop acting like brats anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
 				elseif pcs_gaming <= 40:
-					'The game is pretty much a draw with no one getting the upper hand. Until Anushka starts to... well cheat. She uses her foot to keep jarring Maksim or cover up Timofey''s eyes with her hand at a critical moment. The brothers try and return the favor to her. Soon the three of them are more interested in wrestling and fighting trying to screw each other up than actually win the game. Which leaves you to take advantage of their distractions to win the match.'
-					'Maksim begins to yell, "Not fair, because you''re cheating. You always do this when you''re about to lose." The younger one joins in, "Anushka''s a cheater."'
-					'"You was doing the same to me, so you were cheating too," she says teasing him, but with a smile on her face despite her brother looking mad.'
+					'The game is pretty much a draw with no one getting the upper hand until Anushka starts to... well cheat. She starts jabbing Maksim with her foot and covers up Timofey''s eyes with her hand at a critical moment. The brothers try to return the favor. Soon the three of them are more interested in wrestling and fighting to try to screw each other up than actually winning the game. With everyone else distracted, you take advantage and win the match.'
+					'Realizing what happened, Maksim begins to yell, "Not fair... you cheated. You always do this when you''re about to lose." Timofey joins in, "Anushka''s a cheater."'
+					'"You were doing the same to me, so you were cheating too," she says teasing them with a smile on her face.'
 					*nl
-					'Maksim obviously doesn''t see it that way. "You started it and your groupie took advantage of the situation."'
-					'Anushka laughs at that. "Well who''s fault is that? If you wasn''t consumed with trying to get back at me. It''s unlikely that you would have noticed what she was doing and maybe won."'
+					'Maksim obviously doesn''t see it that way. "You started it, and your groupie took advantage of the situation."'
+					'Anushka laughs at that. "Well who''s fault is that? If you weren''t so consumed with trying to get back at me, you would have noticed what she was doing and maybe won."'
 					'Maksim responds by yelling, "Shut up..."'
 					'Anushka interjects before he can say more, "Be quiet, do you want dad to come back in here again?"'
-					'That makes him shut his mouth and glance at the door as if expecting their dad to burst in any moment. When that moment passes and he doesn''t Maksim jumps on Anushka. "Cheater!" He is loud but not too loud.'
+					'That makes him shut his mouth and glance at the door as if expecting their dad to burst in any moment. When that moment passes and he doesn''t, Maksim jumps on Anushka. "Cheater!" He is loud but not too loud.'
 					*nl
-					'Anushka and Maksim start to wrestle. She quickly starts to get the upper hand because he just isn''t old enough or big enough yet to beat his older sister. Once it becomes clear she is about to pin Maksim down Timofey jumps on her back. The three of them wrestle around. Anushka manages to pin one of them, but not the other at the same time. This is because the first one gets loose as she tries to pin them both. They come close a few times to pinnng her down, but in the end they all just give up. All of them panting as they are out of breath and laying in a heap.'
-					'Finally, Anushka gets up and untangles herself from them. "Come on lets go back to my room." She says to you out of breath. As you follow her out of the room the brothers start to play another game and Makism says. "Next time will win." Just as Anushka closes the door on them.'
+					'Anushka and Maksim start to wrestle. She quickly starts to get the upper hand because he just isn''t big enough yet to beat his older sister. Once it becomes clear she is about to pin him down, Timofey jumps on her back. The three of them wrestle around. Anushka manages to pin one of them, but not the other at the same time. This is because the first one gets loose as she tries to pin them both. They come close a few times to pinning her down, but in the end, they all just give up, all of them panting as they are out of breath and lying in a heap.'
+					'Finally, Anushka gets up and untangles herself from them. "Come on let''s go back to my room." She says to you. As you follow her out of the room, the brothers start to play another game, and Maksim says "next time we''ll win" just as Anushka closes the door on them.'
 				else
-					'The game is pretty much over you since Anushka and you are able to win. It''s not by a lot, but enough the brothers come close. They always fall a little short in both matches.'
+					'Before too long, it''s pretty clear Anushka and you have the upper hand. The brothers keep it close, but they fall a little short in both matches.'
 					'Maksim throws down his controller and turns on Timofey. "Why are you so bad? We could have beat them if you didn''t suck so much."'
 					'Timofey tries to defend himself, "It''s not my fault that Nush and <<$pcs_nickname>> are just too good."'
-					'Before Maksim can respond Anushka cuts him off, "It''s not Timos fault and you know it. When you fall behind you get too aggressive like always which makes it easier for me to kill you. You''re just mad ''cause you got beat by a girl... again," She says in a teasing tone then sticks her tongue out at him.'
-					'Maksim eyes flare at Anushka and it looks like he about to scream at her again. When she interjects, "Calm down, ''cause we don''t want dad in here again." With that he shuts his mouth and glances at the door then glares at Anushka.'
+					'Before Maksim can respond, Anushka cuts him off, "It''s not Timos fault, and you know it. When you fall behind, you get too aggressive like always, which makes it easier for me to kill you. You''re just mad ''cause you got beat by a girl... again," She says in a teasing tone then sticks her tongue out at him.'
+					'Maksim''s eyes flare at Anushka and it looks like he''s about to scream at her again until she interjects, "Calm down, ''cause we don''t want dad in here again." With that, he shuts his mouth and glances at the door then glares at Anushka.'
 					*nl
-					'"Get out... get out of our room," He says to Anushka as he pushes her to try and shove her off the bed.'
+					'"Get out... get out of our room," He says as he tries to shove her off the bed.'
 					'Anushka gets up. "Oh my God, you are such a baby. I don''t even know why I bother playing with you."'
 					'He pushes her towards the door after she gets up. "Good then don''t... get out!"'
 					'Anushka sounds exasperated, "Fine, then, you little brat."'
-					'She turns towards you. "Come on lets go before this little shit starts to cry."'
-					'Makism starts to yell, but catches himself while still loud doesn''t manage to yell. "Fuck you bitch and get out of our room!"'
-					'Timofey runs up to his sister. "No, come back and play with us," He asks in a somewhat pleading tone.'
-					'Instantly, Anushka tenses up and her anger seems to melt away. "Some other time squirt." She says to him with a smile and ruffles his hair much to his annoyance.'
-					'As she closes the door and leaves, you can hear Makism berating his brother for being a pussy by pleading with their sister to play games with them.'
+					'She turns towards you. "Come on let''s go before this little shit starts to cry."'
+					'Maksim starts to yell "Fuck you bitch and get out of our room!" but catches himself and lowers his voice partway through.'
+					'Timofey runs up to his sister. "No, come back and play with us," He says in a somewhat pleading tone.'
+					'Instantly, Anushka eases up, and her anger seems to melt away. "Some other time squirt." She says to him with a smile and ruffles his hair much to his annoyance.'
+					'As she closes the door and leaves, you can hear Maksim berating his brother for being a pussy and pleading with their sister to play games with them.'
 				end
 				act 'Go to Anushka''s room':AnushkaLoc=2&gt'anushapt','anushroom'
 			end	
 		end
 	else
-		'The two of you walk down the hall and enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing. The older one visibly gathers up his courage, "What is it? What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie along again."'
+		'The two of you walk down the hall and enter her brothers'' room. They immediately stop doing what they were doing. Maksim visibly gathers up his courage, "What is it? What do you want?" He notices you and starts staring at your tits. "I see you brought your groupie along again."'
 		'Anushka quickly replies, "Calm down. I just wanted to see if you were up for a rematch." She points to the gaming console in their room.'
 		'Both of them get excited at that. "Yeah and this time we will beat you."'
 		'Anushka quickly replies smiling, "You really think you can beat us this time?."'
@@ -398,39 +401,39 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rematch':
 			'"Come on guys lets just have fun." You tell them.'
 			'"We will win this time!" Maksim looks at the two of you determined.'
 			'"Let''s play," Timofey says smiling.'
-			'The four of you are playing for several minutes. You''ve gotten a lot better since the last time you played. You learned a lot and you are helping out more than you did before. It''s enough that you and Anushka start to get the upper hand.'
+			'The four of you play for several minutes. You''ve gotten a lot better since the last time you played. You learned a lot and are able to help out more than you did before.'
 			act 'Finish':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/anushapt/playgamebro.jpg"></center>'
 				if pcs_gaming <= 20:
-					'The game is pretty much over. All of them are still better players than you are. Anushka does what she can again, but the brothers fairly easily manage to win back to back matches. Both brothers jump up and do some weird little victory dance. "Ha ha we win and you lose," Maksim taunts.'
+					'It''s not enough however as all of them are still better players than you are. Anushka does what she can again, but the brothers fairly easily manage to win back to back matches. Both brothers jump up and do some weird little victory dance. "Ha ha we win and you lose," Maksim taunts.'
 					'Anushka rolls her eyes at their antics. "Yeah, yeah, yeah, you won." She reaches over and ruffles Timofey''s hair which he tries and fails to dodge. "Good job kiddo."'
 					'"Pfft I won it, ''cause Timo almost caused us to lose if I didn''t carry his sorry ass," Maksim says.'
 					'Timofey pulls away from his sister. "Nuh-uh, I almost scored as good you as you did!" It quickly turns into them arguing over who did better.'
-					'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on lets go. They''re not going to stop acting like brat''s anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
+					'Anushka gets up and shakes her head. "Come on let''s go. They''re not going to stop acting like brats anytime soon." You get up and follow her out.'
 				elseif pcs_gaming <= 40:
-					'The two of you are just slightly better than they are and after some time you come out on top. Maksim gets mad, so he throws his controller down. "Fuck!" He turns on his brother. "It''s your fault we lost. God you''re so stupid."'
+					'The two of you are slightly better than they are, and after some time, you come out on top. Maksim gets mad and throws his controller down. "Fuck!" He turns on his brother. "It''s your fault we lost. God you''re so stupid."'
 					'Timofey shakes his head. "No, you''re stupid and you''re why we lost. You always have to try and be the hero, so Nush tricks you every time."'
-					'Maksim suddenly leaps on top of his brother. "Shut your mouth you little shit. She doesn''t trick me," He yells as he starts beating on his little brother. Before you can even react, Anushka grabs Maksim by the back of his collar and yanks him off Timofey. "Leave him alone, ''cause he''s right. I baited you out then <<$pcs_nickname>> killed you. It''s not his fault."'
+					'Maksim suddenly leaps on top of his brother. "Shut your mouth you little shit. She doesn''t trick me," He yells as he starts beating on him. Before you can even react, Anushka grabs Maksim by the back of his collar and yanks him off Timofey. "Leave him alone, ''cause he''s right. I baited you out then <<$pcs_nickname>> killed you. It''s not his fault."'
 					'Maksim gets back up and pushes Anushka. "Get out of my room. Get out or I''ll tell dad you''re picking on us again."'
-					'Anushka just shakes her head and goes for the door. "Come on <<$pcs_nickname>> lets get out of here." Just as you start to go out Anushka stops then looks back in. "Maksim, you better leave him alone or I''ll come back in here to beat your ass." Maksim rushes across the room and pushes the two of you the rest of the way out. He slams the door closed. Anushka angrily goes back to her room.'
+					'Anushka just shakes her head and goes for the door. "Come on <<$pcs_nickname>> let''s get out of here." Just as you start to go out, Anushka stops then looks back in. "Maksim, you better leave him alone, or I''ll come back in here to beat your ass." Maksim rushes across the room and pushes the two of you the rest of the way out. He slams the door closed. Anushka angrily goes back to her room.'
 				else
-					'The game is pretty much over you, Anushka and you are able to win, not by a lot, but enough the brothers come close only to fall a little short in both matches.'
+					'Before too long, it''s pretty clear Anushka and you have the upper hand. The brothers keep it close, but they fall a little short in both matches.'
 					'Maksim throws down his controller. "Fuck!" He turns on his brother. "Why are you so bad? We could have beat them if you didn''t suck so much."'
 					'Timofey tries to defend himself, "It''s not my fault. Nush and <<$pcs_nickname>> are just too good."'
-					'Before Maksim can respond Anushka cuts him off. "It''s not Timos fault and you know it. When you fall behind you get too aggressive and don''t work with Timofey. You''rejust trying to win it on your own. Also, you''re just mad ''cause you got beat by a girl... again." She says in a teasing tone then sticks her tongue out at him.'
-					'Maksim eyes flare at Anushka and it looks like he about to scream at her again. When she interjects, "Calm down, ''cause we don''t want dad in here again." With that he shuts his mouth and glances at the door then glares at Anushka.'
+					'Before Maksim can respond, Anushka cuts him off. "It''s not Timos fault, and you know it. When you fall behind, you get too aggressive, and don''t work with Timofey. You just try to win it on your own. Also, you''re just mad ''cause you got beat by a girl... again." She says in a teasing tone then sticks her tongue out at him.'
+					'Maksim eyes flare at Anushka and it looks like he about to scream at her again until she interjects, "Calm down, ''cause we don''t want dad in here again." With that, he shuts his mouth and glances at the door then glares at Anushka.'
 					*nl
-					'"Get out... get out of our room," he says to Anushka as he pushes on her trying to shove her off the bed.'
+					'"Get out... get out of our room," he says as he tries to shove her off the bed.'
 					'Anushka gets up. "Oh my God you are such a baby, I don''t even know why I bother playing with you."'
 					'He pushes her towards the door after she gets up. "You only play with us to bully us. I don''t want to play with you anymore."'
-					'Anushka sounds exasperated. "Fine then, you little brat, I won''t." She turns towards you. "Come on lets go before this little shit starts to cry."'
-					'Makism starts to yell, but catches himself while still loud he doesn''t manage to yell, "Go suck a cock or something."'
-					'Timofey runs up to his sister. "You will play with us again won''t you," he asks in a somewhat pleading tone.'
-					'Instantly, Anushka tenses up and her anger seems to melt away. "Some other time squirt," she says to him with a smile and ruffles his hair much to his annoyance.'
-					'As she closes the door and leave, you hear Makism berating his brother for being a pussy while pleading with their sister to play games with them.'
+					'Anushka sounds exasperated. "Fine then, you little brat, I won''t." She turns towards you. "Come on let''s go before this little shit starts to cry."'
+					'Maksim starts to yell "Go suck a cock or something!" but catches himself and lowers his voice partway through'
+					'Timofey runs up to his sister. "You will play with us again won''t you?" he asks in a somewhat pleading tone.'
+					'Instantly, Anushka eases up, and her anger seems to melt away. "Some other time squirt," she says to him with a smile and ruffles his hair much to his annoyance.'
+					'As she closes the door and leaves, you can hear Maksim berating his brother for being a pussy and pleading with their sister to play games with them.'
 				end
 				act 'Go to Anushka''s room':AnushkaLoc=2&gt'anushapt','anushroom'
 			end