Cleaned up some text and fixed some truly horrifying machine machine translation.

locations/AlbStars.qsrc

@@ -336,7 +336,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'starlets':
 					elseif AlbinaQW['StarletCustomer'] = 2:
 						AlbinaQW['StarletsCustomerCount'] = 2
 						AlbinaQW['StarletPay'] = rand(6,9)
-						'You see two well dressed middled aged Armenian men approach Albina and start to talking to her.'
+						'You see two well dressed middle aged Armenian men approach Albina and start to talking to her.'
 					elseif AlbinaQW['StarletCustomer'] = 3:
 						AlbinaQW['StarletsCustomerCount'] = 2
 						AlbinaQW['StarletPay'] = rand(6,9)

locations/bedrPar.qsrc

@@ -42,7 +42,7 @@ if ParrotQW['SisterReleaseParrotDay'] + 3 < daystart and ParrotQW['Level'] = 1:
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'When you enter the room you notice <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage is open and he is gone.'
-	'You sister must have released him since you were not able to find a solution in time.'
+	'Your sister must have released him since you were not able to find a solution in time.'
 	ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 0
 	ParrotQW['Level'] = 0
 	ParrotQW['Day'] = 2
@@ -59,16 +59,16 @@ if sisterHere = 2 and ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 1 and ParrotQW['SisKeepParrot'] = 0:
 	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-	'"What is that?" your sister asks while pointing at <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> in his cage'
-	'"I went to the shopping center and bought this bird. Isn''t he the cutest ?"'
+	'"What is that?" your sister asks while pointing at <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> in his cage.'
+	'"I went to the shopping center and bought this bird. Isn''t he the cutest?"'
 	if npc_rel['A33'] > 50:
-		'"Not really, but I can see this is something you really want. As long as he doesn''t make too much noise, I don''t really care"'
+		'"Not really, but I can see this is something you really want. As long as he doesn''t make too much noise, I don''t really care."'
 		ParrotQW['SisKeepParrot'] = 1
 	end
 	if npc_rel['A33']  <= 50:
-		'"No he isn''t cute, and I suggest you take it out of here, I am not sharing my room with a bird."'
-		'You feel kind of sad but you understand your sister. You should have asked her before buying it.'
-		'You go to the window, open it and release the bird'
+		'"No he isn''t cute, and I suggest you get it out of here. I am not sharing my room with a bird!"'
+		'You are somewhat upset, but you understand. You should have asked her before buying it.'
+		'You go to the window, open it and release the bird.'
 		ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 0
 	end
 
@@ -89,25 +89,25 @@ end
 if ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 1:
 	'<a href="exec:gt ''popu'',''start2''"><<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>></a> is sitting in his cage'
 	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 10: '<<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> starts squawking at you when you enter the room.'
-	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 10 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 20: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. It sounds almost like he is saying "<b>hello  <<$pcs_nickname>></b>"'
-	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 20 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 30: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is clearly saying "<b>hello  <<$pcs_nickname>></b>"'
-	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 30 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 35: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$pcs_nickname>> very pretty</b>"'
-	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 35 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 40: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$pcs_nickname>> great body</b>"'
-	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 40 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 50: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>> you''re the best</b>"'
-	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 50 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 55: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Yeah <<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>> swallow it all</b>"'
-	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 55 and ParrotQW['Level'] < 3: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Yeah <<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>>  your pussy tastes great</b>"'
+	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 10 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 20: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. It sounds almost like he is saying "<b>Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>!</b>"'
+	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 20 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 30: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is clearly saying "<b>Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>!</b>"'
+	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 30 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 35: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$pcs_nickname>> very pretty!</b>"'
+	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 35 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 40: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$pcs_nickname>> great body!</b>"'
+	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 40 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 50: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>>, you''re the best!</b>"'
+	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 50 and daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 55: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Yeah <<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>>, swallow it all!</b>"'
+	if daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] > 55 and ParrotQW['Level'] < 3: 'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Yeah <<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>>, your pussy tastes great!</b>"'
 	if ParrotQW['Level'] = 3:
 		parfixrand = rand(0,9)
-		if parfixrand = 0:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>What Did You Say To Me?</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 1:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>3.1415926535897932384 ....</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 2:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Come Closer, My Friend</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 3:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Here Kitty, Kitty!</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 4:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>I Just Met You and This is Crazy</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 5:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Bow Before Me!</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 6:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>He’s Just a Friend, Honest!</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 7:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>What Did You Do To My Socks?</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 8:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>That’s What She Said!</b>"'
-		if parfixrand = 9:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Help! They’ve Turned Me Into a Parrot!</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 0:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>What did you say to me?</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 1:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>3.1415926535897932384....</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 2:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Come closer, my friend.</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 3:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Here kitty, kitty!</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 4:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>I just met you, and this is crazy!</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 5:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Bow before me!</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 6:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>He’s just a friend, honest!</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 7:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>What did you do to my socks?</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 8:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>That''s what she said!</b>"'
+		if parfixrand = 9:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Help! They''ve turned me into a parrot!</b>"'
 		killvar 'parfixrand'
 	end
 
@@ -164,7 +164,7 @@ if sister_indorf = 0:
 		elseif anyaloc = 26:
 			if sisboypartyQW = 1: sisboypartyQW = 2
 			if sisboyparty = -1: sisboyparty = 1
-			'Your drunken sister Anya is sound asleep in her bed.'
+			'A drunken Anya is sound asleep in her bed.'
 		end
 	end
 end
@@ -198,7 +198,7 @@ sis_watch = 0
 if sisterHere = 0 or sisboytrio > 0:
 	if pornMagazine > 0:gs 'events', 'read_porn'
 	if rexCarCount >= 9 and hour < 3 and rexSmsDay ! daystart and smsForRex < 13:
-		act 'Send Rex a SMS message': gt 'reks','sms'
+		act 'Send Rex a text message': gt 'reks','sms'
 	end
 	if pcs_horny >= 50:
 		act 'Masturbate':gt 'selfplay', 'start'
@@ -243,7 +243,7 @@ if pcs_sewng >= 80:
 			gobramin = (pcs_sewng - 70) * 2
 			newgobelen += rand(gobramin,gobramax)
 			gs'stat'
-			if newgobelen < 1000:'You spent an hour working on your tapestry, which is now <<newgobelen/10>> percent finished.'
+			if newgobelen < 1000:'You spend an hour working on your tapestry, which is now <<newgobelen/10>> percent finished.'
 				if newgobelen >= 1000:
 				newgobelen = 0
 				gobelen += 1
@@ -303,7 +303,7 @@ if hour > 8 and hour < 22:
 		act 'Play something on the guitar (10 minutes)':
 			mood += 10
 			'You pick up your guitar and start to play some songs you know, just for your own entertainment.'
-			'You hum along the tune, relaxing into the music, just enjoying it. When you look up a quarter of an hour passed and you are in a much better mood.'
+			'You hum along the tune, relaxing into the music, just enjoying it. When you look up a quarter of an hour has passed and you are in a much better mood.'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -435,7 +435,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 	'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost4.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'All of a sudden you hear a familiar voice yell out, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, time to get up. You can''t spend the whole day laying around!"'
+	'All of a sudden, you hear a familiar voice yell out. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, time to get up! You can''t spend the whole day laying around!"'
 	wait 1000
 	$npc_nickname['A29'] = input('<center>What name do you address your mother by?<br>Mother (default), Mum, Mom, Mama, etc.</center>')
 	if $npc_nickname['A29'] = '':$npc_nickname['A29'] = '<<$temp_nickname>>'
@@ -446,17 +446,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You tiredly open your eyes seeing your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> standing over you, "Fifteen more minutes..."'
-		'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> lets out a loud sigh, "No, up now!" as she yanks the cover off...'
-		'"<<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>!" you exclaim, as you feel a slight cold breeze hit your body.'
-		'"No excuses, <<$pcs_nickname>>. The summer holidays will be over before you know it and you mustn''t get used to sleeping in, or you won''t be able to get up early when school starts again. So, from now on set your alarm to wake up at a reasonable time." <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she stares at you expectantly.'
+		'You tiredly open your eyes and see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> standing over you. "Fifteen more minutes..." you mumble.'
+		'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> lets out a loud sigh, "No, up now!" she says as she yanks the covers off...'
+		'"<<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>!" you exclaim as you feel a slightly cold breeze hit your body.'
+		'"No excuses <<$pcs_nickname>>. The summer holidays will be over before you know it and you mustn''t get used to sleeping in, or you won''t be able to get up early when school starts again. So, from now on set your alarm to wake up at a reasonable time." <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she stares at you expectantly.'
 		act 'Get up':
 			cla & *clr
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost4.jpg"></center>'
-			'As soon as you get off your now coverless bed, your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> is quick to resume her nagging, telling you again what you already heard from her a few moments ago. "Summer is no excuse to laze around all day, you can''t sleep in anymore, not even for another fifteen minutes." She''s not even looking at you while she talks, but luckily for you that means she misses you rolling your eyes.'
+			'As soon as you get off your now coverless bed, your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> is quick to resume her nagging, telling you again what you already heard from her a few moments ago. "Summer is no excuse to laze around all day. You can''t sleep in anymore, not even for another fifteen minutes." She''s not even looking at you while she talks, but luckily for you that means she misses you rolling your eyes.'
 			'"What are you going to do when school starts, or when you get a job? You better get into the habit of setting your alarm so you can wake up bright and early."'
 			act 'Continue':
 				cla & *clr
@@ -464,23 +464,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
-				'You let out an exasperated sigh, "Yeah, yeah I know, you told me that already. So, how early are we talking?"'
-				'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> shoots you a sharp look and you know to fix your attitude or else. "Well, depends on what you plan to do in the morning. There''s breakfast, showering and brushing your teeth, doing your hair and then makeup and shaving if you really need to. If I remember right... Anya used to wake up at 06:00 for school."'
+				'You let out an exasperated sigh. "Yeah, yeah I know, you told me that already. So, how early are we talking?"'
+				'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> shoots you a sharp look and you know to fix your attitude or else. "Well, that depends on what you plan to do in the morning. There''s breakfast, showering and brushing your teeth, doing your hair and then makeup and shaving if you really need to. If I remember right... Anya used to wake up at 06:00 for school."'
 				act 'Continue':
 					cla & *clr
 					minut += 2
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost4.jpg"></center>'
-					'"You want me to wake up that early?!" You huff. "Can''t I wake up at like... 07:00?"'
-					'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> shrugs. "You could, but then you might have to cut corners or even end up running late to school, and I won''t be having any of that. Your teachers won''t either," she warns you before making her way towards the kitchen. "Oh, don''t forget; you need to head down to the clinic and see the gynecologist for a check up. Not just once, but every month," she adds quickly.'
+					'"You want me to wake up that early?!" you huff. "Can''t I wake up at like... 07:00?"'
+					'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> shrugs. "You could, but then you might have to cut corners or even end up running late to school, and I won''t be having any of that. Your teachers won''t either." she warns you before making her way towards the kitchen. "Oh, don''t forget; you need to head down to the clinic and see the gynecologist for a check up. Not just once, but every month." she adds quickly.'
 					act 'But why do I--':
 						cla & *clr
 						minut += 2
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Before you can finish, she cuts you off. "I''m not going to have you running around town like so many of those other girls I see! Opening their legs for any boy that comes around..." She shakes her head in disgust. "I want a referral every month and it better tell me you''re still a virgin or else, understand?" <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she storms out of the room, without giving you a chance to respond..'
+						'Before you can finish, she cuts you off. "I''m not going to have you running around town like so many of those other girls I see! Opening their legs for any boy that comes around..." She shakes her head in disgust. "I want a referral every month and it better tell me you''re still a virgin or else, understand?" <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she storms out of the room without giving you a chance to respond.'
 						act 'I understand...':gt 'budilnik', 'start'
 					end
 				end

locations/bedrPar2.qsrc

@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 	'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Master bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/bedrpar2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'The room in which your parents live. Their large bed, <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''parents_wardrobe''">wardrobe</a> and other closets take up most of the space.'
+	'The room in which your parents sleep. Their large bed, <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''parents_wardrobe''">wardrobe</a> and other closets take up most of the space.'
 	gs 'family'
 	gs 'family_schedule'
 
@@ -39,7 +39,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 					prezikday = daystart
 					prezikProver = 0
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/accessories/birthcontrol/condoms_steal.jpg"></center>'
-					'After you make sure you''re not seen, you quickly search your parents'' room for their condom stash and take a few. Now you have '+iif(preziktype = 0, '<<prezik>>', '<<prezikcount>>')+' condoms.'
+					'After you make sure you''re not seen, you quickly search your parents'' room for their condom stash and take a few. You now have '+iif(preziktype = 0, '<<prezik>>', '<<prezikcount>>')+' condoms.'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'bedrPar2'
 				end
 			end
@@ -55,7 +55,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'kamasutra':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 1
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/book.jpg"></center>'
-	'The cover says "Kamasutra"'
+	'The cover says "Kama Sutra"'
 	act 'Leave': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 	act 'Read': kamasutra_page = 0 & kamasutra_day = daystart & gt 'bedrPar2', 'read_book'
 end
@@ -125,14 +125,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 	minut += 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You crack the door open just a little and you see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and Vladimir near their bed, you hear your mother say. "Stop the kids are here." As Vlad starts running his hands all over her body. He doesn''t seem to care about what she says as he doesn''t stop. "Come on, they won''t hear us and you know you want it."'
+	'You crack the door open just a little and you see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and Vladimir near their bed. You hear your mother say "Stop the kids are here." as Vlad starts running his hands all over her body. He doesn''t seem to care about what she says as he doesn''t stop. "Come on, they won''t hear us and you know you want it."'
 	act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
 
 	act 'Keep peeking':
 		cla & *clr
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You mother seems to be loving the attention and doesn''t put up much of a fight as he starts to undress her. Once she is mostly naked he pushes her down on the bed, so she is sitting on it right in front of him. Her head about crotch height to him, apparantly knowing what he wants. She opens the fly on his pants and pulls out his cock, she strokes it a few times in her hand until he gets hard. Then she takes his dick into her mouth and starts sucking it, he moans softly as she does. "Fuck you are the best cock sucker ever Natasha."'
+		'You mother seems to be loving the attention and doesn''t put up much of a fight as he starts to undress her. Once she is mostly naked, he pushes her down on the bed so she is sitting on it in front of him, her head about crotch height to him, apparantly knowing what he wants. She opens the fly on his pants and pulls out his cock, stroking it a few times in her hand until he gets hard. She then takes his dick into her mouth and starts sucking it. He moans softly as she does. "Fuck you are the best cock sucker ever, Natasha."'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 		gs 'stat'
 
@@ -142,7 +142,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 			cla & *clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad3.jpg"></center>'
-			'After several minutes of watching your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> sucks Vlads cock he says. "Come on I want to fuck you." With that he starts to strip and she helps him while never stopping sucking his dick. Once he is naked she finally stops and he lays down on the bed, she straddles him and quickly starts riding his dick reverse cowgirl style. Both of them start moaning as they fuck. "Vlad oh god your dick feels so good in my pussy, it is so big."'
+			'After several minutes of watching your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> suck Vlad''s cock he says "Come on, I want to fuck you." With that he starts to strip and she helps him while contnuing to suck his dick. Once he is naked, she finally stops and he lies down on the bed. She straddles him and quickly starts riding his dick reverse cowgirl style. Both of them start moaning as they fuck. "Oh god Vlad, your dick feels so good in my pussy! It''s so big."'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 
@@ -152,7 +152,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 				cla & *clr
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad4.jpg"></center>'
-				'Vlad suddenly grabs her and throws her on her side on the bed. Which causes his dick to come out of her, he turns on his side, lifting up her leg with one hand while using the other to guide his cock. He feels around until he places the head of his dick against your anus, then he pushes it in, only her pussy juices for lubricate. It slides in surprisingly easy, you can only guess this is far from the firs time your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> has had a dick in her ass. They both moan in pleasure and she rubs her clit as Vlad fucks her butt.'
+				'Vlad suddenly grabs her and throws her on her side on the bed. He turns on his side, lifting up her leg with one hand while using the other to guide his cock. He feels around until he places the head of his dick against your anus, then he pushes it in, using only her pussy juices for lubrication. It slides in surprisingly easy and you can only guess that this is far from the first time your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> has had a dick in her ass. They both moan in pleasure and she rubs her clit as Vlad fucks her ass.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
@@ -161,7 +161,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 					cla & *clr
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad5.jpg"></center>'
-					'They keep going for several more minutes until Vlad starts to pant and then he buries his dick balls deep in your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> ass and lets out a loud moan as he twitches a bit. After a few moments of this pass he pulls out of her and rolls off the bed. She lays on her back and pulls her butt cheeks wide, giving Vlad and you both a good view of her asshole as cum starts leaking out of it. Vlad chuckles and says. "You are such a nasty bitch Natasha." She smiles to him and replies. "Thats why you love me." With them now starting to get cleaned up, you decide it is time to go before you get caught.'
+					'They keep going for several more minutes until Vlad starts to pant and then he buries his dick balls deep in your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>''s ass and lets out a loud moan as he twitches a bit. After a few moments of this pass, he pulls out of her and rolls off the bed. She lays on her back and pulls her cheeks wide, giving Vlad and you both a good view of her asshole as cum starts leaking out of it. Vlad chuckles and says "You are such a nasty bitch Natasha." She smiles at him and replies "That''s why you love me." With them now starting to get cleaned up, you decide it is time to go before you get caught.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'

locations/korr.qsrc

@@ -70,28 +70,28 @@ gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 
 if remkorr = 0:
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/korr.jpg"></center>'
-	'In the hallway the wallpaper is somewhere detached from the walls and anyway from long time faded. A <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a> hangs on the wall.'
+	'The wallpaper in the hallway has long since faded and is peeling from the walls. A <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a> hangs on the wall.'
 else
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/korr2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Modern hall with stylish furniture, a wall-mounted <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>.'
+	'A modern hall with stylish furniture, including a wall-mounted <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>.'
 end
 
 if umbrella > 0:'On a hook hangs an umbrella.'
 
 if krolik = 1:'Resting on the floor there''s your rabbit <a href="exec:gt ''krol'', ''start''"><<$namekrol>></a>.'
-if ParrotQW['Owned1'] = 1:'In the cage sits your parrot <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$ParrotQW[''Name1'']>></a>.'
+if ParrotQW['Owned1'] = 1:'Your parrot sits in a cage. <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$ParrotQW[''Name1'']>></a>.'
 
 if parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 1:
 	parkblackmail = 2
 	parkday = daystart
-	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it you find several pictures inside. Shit! Are pictures of you giving blowjobs to two guys in the park.'
+	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it, you find several pictures inside. Shit! Are these pictures of you giving blowjobs to two guys in the park?'
 	'A small note accompanying them says:'
-	'If you do not want these pictures to posted on your porch and sent to your work place, come to this address (address listed is a Studio)'
+	'If you do not want these pictures to be posted on your porch and sent to your work place, then come to this address (address listed is a Studio)'
 	'PS, if you do not come today, these pictures will be hanging in your entrance hall tomorrow.'
 elseif parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 2:
 	parkblackmail = 0
 	fotoyousuck = 1
-	'Oh shit! Photos of you with your face covered in sperm and two dicks in your mouth are covering your entrance hall walls.'
+	'Oh shit! Photos of you with your face covered in cum with two dicks in your mouth are covering your entrance hall walls.'
 end
 
 !!if rand (0,2) ! 0:gs 'din_bad' & dynamic $mobile_check
@@ -102,7 +102,7 @@ if hour >= 9 and hour <= 20 and santehnikDolg > 0 and money >= santehnikDolg:
 	act 'Go to the door':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You go to the door and look through the peephole. You see a dark male figure. Apparently the man heard you and says through the door. "It''s me. Grisha, the plumber. You owe me some money, remember?"'
+		'You go to the door and look through the peephole. You see a dark male figure. Apparently the man heard you. "It''s me. Grisha, the plumber. You owe me some money, remember?" he syas through the door.'
 
 		act 'Answer the door':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -137,7 +137,7 @@ if BurgerQW['IvanQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 		year += 5
 		age = year - ((pcs_dob - (pcs_dob mod 10000)) / 10000)
 		money = 2000
-		'A police patrol arrives and takes you to court. After standing a trial, you were given five years of general regime and required to pay your debt of <<DolgRS>>.'
+		'A police patrol arrives and takes you to court. After standing trial, you are given five years of jail time and are required to pay your debt of <<DolgRS>>.'
 
 		act 'Sit on the area':
 			*clr & cla
@@ -177,7 +177,7 @@ if BurgerQW['IvanQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 			lektor = 0
 			gs 'stat'
 
-			'Time draggs on slowly. Your life and work are tedious and monotonous. You''ve been sewing for five years, having meals in the dining room and going to sleep in the barracks surrounded by other women inmates. With your salary of 2,000 <b>₽</b> per month 1000 of which going on debt repayment. But for as slow as it seems, time does not stand still and finally your torment comes to an end. You are released and given 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You take the train and came back to the city.'
+			'Time drags on slowly. Your life and work are tedious and monotonous. You''ve been sewing for five years, having meals in the dining room and going to sleep in the barracks surrounded by other female inmates. 1,000 <b>₽</b> of your 2,000 <b>₽</b> per month salary goes towards your debt repayment. As slow as it seems, time does not stand still and your torment finally comes to an end. You are released and given 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You board the train and come back to the city.'
 
 			act 'Get off the train': gt 'city_industrial_train', 'outside'
 		end
@@ -188,29 +188,30 @@ end
 if BurgerQW['IvanQWDay'] ! daystart and BurgerQW['IvanQW']  = 1 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 20:
 	'<b><font color="red">The doorbell rings</font></b>'
 
-	act 'Come to the door':
+	act 'Walk up to the door':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You came to the door and look through the peephole. You saw a few men. Even in the dark you recognize them from their caps. One of the men says through the door. <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>> open, police.'
+		'You walk up to the door and look through the peephole. You see a few men, and even in the dark, you recognize them from their caps. <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>! This is the police, open up!'
 
 		act 'Answer the door':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 60
 			BurgerQW['IvanQW']  = 2
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You open the door to police wondering what they want from you. There are several men in uniform and others in civilian clothes. A lean and skinny guy with with a weeks worth of stubble and a pistol in a holster on a belt-tied armpit says: "Witness please take a seat, while we search the apartment of the citizen accused of stealing." The investigator turns to you. "That''s a warrant for your arrest, while this is a search warrant. You can read it." The policemen full search your apartment. Soon, one of them came out and says: "Here, are found the keys, according to the description they look like the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen." The witnesses signs the protocol got from the investigator. He then frowns at you and nodds to the policeman, who puts your hands behind your back and snaps the handcuffs around your wrists.'
+			'You open the door, wondering what they want from you. There are several men in uniform and others in civilian clothes. A lean and skinny guy with with a weeks worth of stubble and a pistol in a holster slung under his armpit says "Please take a seat while we search the apartment." The decective then turns to you. "That''s a warrant for your arrest and this is a search warrant. You can read them." The police fully search your apartment. Soon, one of them comes out and says: "Here are the keys. According to the description, these look like the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen." The detective frowns at you and nods to the policeman, who puts your hands behind your back and snaps the handcuffs around your wrists.'
 
 			act 'Go with the police':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 60
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You''re taken out of the house in handcuffs and pushed into a police UAZ. After the metal doors slams, the UAZ car leaves, shaking and growling at each bump. Finally you arrive somewhere and you are taken from the UAZ into a building and in an office where the investigator you already know, is waiting for you. He tooks the handcuffs off you and offers you a seat. You sit in a hard and uncomfortable chair, meanwhile the investigator turns the TV on and inserts a videocassette. On the screen there''s a picture of a security camera in Bystroeshke. At the beginning it only shows corridor. Soon you appear in the corridor. You go to the office door, opened it and enter. After a while, the door opens again and you come out of the office holding a thick envelope. The investigator takes the VCR tape out and then he inserts another one. It shows Chubais office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and take an envelope with <<$BurgerQW[''IvanSecurityCamDesc'']>> written on it. The investigator turns the TV off, takes a plastic bag from the table with the keys and finally speaks. "Tests prove that the keys found in your apartment are those to the office and the safe of Bystroezhki. The tapes from the surveillance cameras clearly shows you entering the office and taking 650.000 rubles." He takes out a pen and paper and begins to write. While writing he looks up to you with gloomy eyes and says. "A confession will help you in the court. Since this is a first time offense and provided you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence, if you admit your guilt."'
+				'You''re taken out of the house in handcuffs and pushed into a police UAZ. After the door slams shut, the car leaves, shaking and growling at each bump. You finally arrive somewhere and you are taken from the car and into a building. You are brought into an interview room where the dectective is waiting for you. He takes the handcuffs off you and offers you a seat. You sit in a hard and uncomfortable chair while the detective turns the TV on and inserts a video tape. On the screen is a picture of a security camera in Bystroeshke. You soon appear in the corridor, go to the office door and enter. After a while, the door opens again and you come out of the office holding a thick envelope. The detective takes the tape out and inserts another one.' 
+				'It shows Chubais'' office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and take an envelope with <<$BurgerQW[''IvanSecurityCamDesc'']>> written on it. The detective turns the TV off, picks up a plastic bag with the keys inside and finally speaks. "Tests prove that the keys found in your apartment are those to the office and the safe of Bystroezhki. The tapes from the surveillance cameras clearly show you entering the office and taking 650,000 rubles." He takes out a pen and paper and begins to write. While writing, he looks up to you with gloomy eyes and says. "A confession will help you in the court. Since this is a first time offense and provided you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence if you admit your guilt."'
 
 				act 'Sign confession':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 60
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You sign a confession and the investigator barks: "Duty officer." A policeman enters the room. The investigator nods in your direction and tells him "Take her."'
+					'You sign the confession and the detective barks: "Duty officer." A policeman enters the room and the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
 
 					act 'Go':gt 'kameraKPZ'
 				end
@@ -219,7 +220,7 @@ if BurgerQW['IvanQWDay'] ! daystart and BurgerQW['IvanQW']  = 1 and hour >= 8 an
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 60
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You tell the investigator what actually happened. How Ivan framed you. But the investigator hardly listen to you for a while, them he slams his fist on the table and yells at you, "I was not born yesterday, i don''t believe such nonsense. If you will not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" A policeman enters the room. The investigator nods in your direction and tells "Take her."'
+					'You tell the detective what actually happened and how Ivan framed you, but he hardly listens to you before he slams his fist on the table and yells at you, "I was not born yesterday! If you will not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" A policeman enters the room and the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
 
 					act 'Go':gt 'kameraKPZ'
 				end
@@ -256,23 +257,22 @@ $ninel0 = {
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel00.jpg"></center>'
-	'You open the door. Standing on the threshold there''s a pretty young girl with a doctors bag in her hand.'
-	'You greet her.'
-	'"Hello. My name is Ninel P. - I do the home visits for the clinic. Where is the patient?"'
+	'You open the door. Standing on the threshold is a pretty young girl with a medical bag in her hand. You greet her.'
+	'"Hello, my name is Ninel. - I do the home visits for the clinic. Where is the patient?"'
 	'"That would be me ... kha-kha-kha."'
-	'"I see. First we need to get you back into bed."'
+	'"I see. First, we need to get you back into bed."'
 
 	act 'Follow the doctor in the bedroom and lay down':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		ninelmet = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom0.jpg"></center>'
-		'The doctor sat on the edge of your bed and checks your forehead:'
-		'(Doctor) - What are your symptoms <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?'
-		'(You) - Of course... - You start to answer but end up coughing. - Sorry, I have high fever, sore throat and a cough that''s killing me'
-		'(Doctor) - Running nose? Headaches? Aching bones?'
-		'(You) - Yes, alla of them'
-		'(Doctor) - Well, take your clothes off, so I can examine you.'
+		'The doctor sits on the edge of your bed and checks your forehead.'
+		'"What are your symptoms <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?"'
+		'"Of course..." You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry. I have high fever, sore throat and a cough that''s killing me!"'
+		'"Running nose? Headaches? Aching bones?"'
+		'"Yes, all of them."'
+		'"Well, take your clothes off so I can examine you."'
 
 		act 'Undress':
 			cla
@@ -282,25 +282,25 @@ $ninel0 = {
 			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You undressed and the doctor listens to your lungs for a long time. Her hands are cool and gentle as she touches you, while the stethoscope is cold...'
-			'(Doctor) - Mmmm, now lets take a look at your mouth, open wide and say Aaah...'
+			'You undress and the doctor listens to your lungs for a long time. Her hands are cool and gentle as she touches you, while the stethoscope is cold.'
+			'"Mmmm, now let''s take a look at your mouth. open wide and say Aaah."'
 
-			act 'A-a-a':
+			act 'Ahh':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel03.jpg"></center>'
-				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in examining your sore throat'
-				'(Doctor) - I see... your throat is very red and inflamed... Now we need to take your temperature.'
+				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in, examining your sore throat'
+				'"I see. Your throat is very red and inflamed. Now we need to take your temperature.'
 
 				act 'Put a thermometer in your mouth':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel04.jpg"></center>'
-					'(Dr.) No, not so. The temperature needs to be measured rectally.'
-					'(You) - What...?'
-					'(Doctor) - It''s more preceisa and don''t be afraid, <<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s not painful.'
-					'(You) - Well if i have to...'
-					'(Doctor) - It''s necessary. Come on, lie down on your stomach and spread your buttocks with the hands, please.'
+					'"No, not like that. The temperature needs to be measured rectally.'
+					'"What...?"'
+					'"It''s more precise. Don''t be afraid, it''s not painful."'
+					'"Well if I have to..."'
+					'"It''s necessary. Come on, lie down on your stomach and spread your buttocks with your hands please."'
 
 					act 'Change position':
 						cla
@@ -308,7 +308,7 @@ $ninel0 = {
 						clr
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom2.jpg"></center>'
-						'You obediently roll over offering your ass. The doctor lubricates your anus with some vaselin and deftly introduces a thermometer. You flinch, not from pain but pleasure. The doctor doesn''t leaves just stick the thermometer in your ass but slowly moves it back and forth... It''s very nice and you feel a growing excitement.'
+						'You obediently roll over, offering your ass. The doctor lubricates your anus with some vaselin and deftly introduces the thermometer. You flinch, not from pain but pleasure. The doctor doesn''t just stick the thermometer in your ass, but slowly moves it back and forth. It''s very nice and you feel your excitement growing.'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -318,8 +318,8 @@ $ninel0 = {
 								cla
 								*clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
-								'Doctor takes the thermometer out of your ass and checks it'
-								'(Dr.) 39.2 ... Very bad. Please turn on your back, I need to palpate the lymph nodes.'
+								'The doctor takes the thermometer out of your ass and checks it.'
+								'"39.2. Very bad. Please turn on your back, I need to palpate the lymph nodes.'
 
 								act 'Roll over on your back':
 									cla
@@ -327,8 +327,8 @@ $ninel0 = {
 									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom5.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor began to stroke and knead your stomach and thighs. You are not actually sure this is a medical procedure, she does it for too long and tenderly, but it''s too pleasant and you don''t object.'
-									'Meanwhile, your excitement is growing, you feel your pussy moistening and you start to whine sweetly...'
+									'The doctor begins to stroke and knead your stomach and thighs. You are not actually sure if this is a medical procedure. She does it for too long, but it''s too pleasant and you don''t object.'
+									'Your excitement continues to grow and you feel your pussy moistening as you start to whine sweetly...'
 
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 									gs 'stat'
@@ -341,17 +341,17 @@ $ninel0 = {
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom6.jpg"></center>'
 										'You blush with embarrassment, but then fall below the hands of the doctor and she begins to caress your pussy'
-										'(You) - Doctor, what are you doing! - You scream at the same time embarrassed, outraged and frightened.'
-										'(Doctor) - Flying you, silly. I feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use his power quietly.'
-										'(You) - So you''re a magician, too?'
-										'(Doctor) - Yes, only a special kind magic, Tantric. Have you heard of it?'
-										'(You) - No, I don''t think so...'
-										'(Doctor) - It''s a magic, based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only when having sex.'
-										'(You) - So ..?'
-										'(Doctor) - That is, if I have sex with you, I will heal you. So? Do you agree?'
-										'(You) - And what should i do in return?'
-										'(Doctor) - Nothing - I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I see you have orgasms only if conjure.'
-										'(You) - Then of course - I agree.'
+										'"Doctor, what are you doing!" you scream feeling embarrassed, outraged and frightened.'
+										'"I feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use his power quietly." she replies.'
+										'"So you''re a magician too?"'
+										'"Yes, but only with a special kind magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?'
+										'"No, I don''t think so..."'
+										'"It''s based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can only cast spells when having sex."'
+										'"So ..?"'
+										'"That is, if I have sex with you, I will heal you. So? Do you agree?"'
+										'"And what should I do in return?"'
+										'"Nothing. I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I will see that you only have orgasms if conjured."'
+										'"Then of course I agree."'
 
 										gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 										gs 'stat'
@@ -366,16 +366,16 @@ $ninel0 = {
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
-							'(You) - Doctor, what the hell are you doing?'
-							'The doctor takes the thermometer out of your ass and calmly replies:'
-							'(Doctor) - I measure your temperature. 39.2 - very bad.'
+							'"Doctor, what the hell are you doing?" you squeal.'
+							'She takes the thermometer out of your ass and calmly replies:'
+							'"I''m measuring your temperature. 39.2, very bad."'
 
 							act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
 								cla
-								'(You, scared) - Doctor, what''s wrong with me?'
-								'(Dr.) Do you really have a bad flu. But I''ll make you an injection of antibiotic and antigen, and you will soon feel better.'
+								'"Doctor, what''s wrong with me?" you ask, somewhat scared.'
+								'"You have a really bad flu, but I''ll make you an injection of antibiotic and antigen. You will soon feel better."'
 
-								act 'Lie on your stomach and bare your ass':
+								act 'Get injection':
 									cla
 									*clr
 									minut += 10
@@ -384,10 +384,10 @@ $ninel0 = {
 									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom4.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor gives you a shot in one of your ass cheeks - you cry'
-									'(Doctor) - That''s about everything. You have to rest in bed, drink hot drinks, take antibiotics and nose drops, stay on a balanced diet. When the temperature drops, come to the clinic to see me.'
-									'(You) - Thank you, Doctor, i will follow your instructions.'
-									'Doctor says goodbye and leaves.'
+									'The doctor jabs the needle into one of your ass cheeks and injects the contents. You whimper slightly.'
+									'"That''s about everything. You have to rest in bed, drink hot drinks, take antibiotics and nose drops, stay on a balanced diet. When your temperature drops, come to the clinic to see me."'
+									'"Thank you, Doctor, I will follow your instructions."'
+									'The doctor says goodbye and leaves.'
 
 									act 'Back to bed':gt 'bedr'
 								end
@@ -396,35 +396,35 @@ $ninel0 = {
 
 						act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
 							cla
-							'(You, scared) - Doctor, what''s wrong with me?'
-							'(Doctor) - I''m afraid you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you an immediate treatment'
-							'(You) - What''s ?! You mean in the hospital, or what?'
-							'(Doctor) - Yes, at the clinic.'
+							'"Doctor, what''s wrong with me?" you ask fearfully.'
+							'"I''m afraid you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you recieve immediate treatment." she replies.'
+							'"What''s that?! You mean, in the hospital?" you shriek.'
+							'"Yes, at the clinic." she calmly replies.'
 
 							act 'Refuse':
 								cla
 								*clr
-								'(You, sobbing) - Oh, Doctor, I can''t go to the hospital ...'
-								'(Doctor, thoughtfully) - Well... I guess we could do in a different way then... I''ll give you a couple of shots, to start with...'
-								'(You) - Oh, thank you, doctor!'
+								'"Doctor, I can''t go to the hospital!"'
+								'She smiles at you. "Well... I guess we could do it a different way then. I''ll give you a couple of shots to start with.'
+								'"Oh thank you, doctor!"'
 
 								act 'Lie on your stomach and bare your ass':
 									cla
 									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom9.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor pats your ass a few times and you suddenly develop an incredible sexual arousal. It is as if a fire started between your thighs, your pussy burns and drips, your breath gets heavy, your nipples harden and get stiff...'
-									'(You) - Doctor, what''s happening? - You ask almost screaming, embarrassed and kind of frightened, but your voice breaks, betraying your arousal, and you moan voluptuously'
-									'(Doctor) - Yeah! I knew it - I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my power quietly.'
-									'(You) - So you''re a magician too!'
-									'(Doctor) - Yes, only a special kind magic, Tantric. Have you heard of it?'
-									'(You) - No, I don''t think so...'
-									'(Doctor) - It''s magic, based on sensuality and sex, roughly speaking, I can cast spells only while having sex.'
-									'(You) - So ..?'
-									'(Doctor) - That''s it, if we have sex with you, I will heal you. Do you agree?'
-									'(You) - And what should i do in return?'
-									'(Doctor) - Nothing - I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I see you, have orgasms only if conjure.'
-									'(You) - Then of course - I agree.'
+									'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass cheek and then pats your ass a few times. You suddenly develop an incredible sexual arousal and it is as if a fire has started between your thighs. Your pussy burns and drips, your breath gets heavy, your nipples harden and get stiff...'
+									'"Doctor, what''s happening?" you ask, almost screaming. You feel embarrassed and kind of frightened, but your voice breaks, betraying your arousal, and you moan voluptuously'
+									'"Yeah! I knew it! I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my power quietly."'
+									'"So you''re a magician too?!"'
+									'"Yes, but only with a special kind magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
+									'"No, I don''t think so..."'
+									'"It''s based on sensuality and sex, roughly speaking, I can cast spells only while having sex."'
+									'"So...?"'
+									'"That''s it. If we have sex, I will heal you. Do you agree?!'
+									'"And what should I do in return?"'
+									'"Nothing. I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I''ll see that you only have orgasms if conjured.'
+									'"Then of course I agree."'
 
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 									gs 'stat'
@@ -443,20 +443,20 @@ $ninel0 = {
 $drPP = {
 	cla
 	*clr
-	'You answer the door. On the threshold there is an older balding man with a medical bag in his hand.'
+	'You answer the door. On the threshold is an older, balding man with a medical bag in his hand.'
 	'"Hello, doctor."'
-	'"Hello, dear. I am Peter, the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this draft.'
+	'"Hello, dear. I am Peter, the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this cold air.'
 
 	act 'Take the doctor to the bedroom.':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You get back to the bedroom with the doctor. He sits on the edge of the bed and feels your forehead'
-		'"So <<$pcs_nickname>>. What are your symptoms?'
-		'(You) - Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have sore throat - very sore actually - and high temperature.'
-		'(Doctor) - And cough, as I see it. And judging by your voice, also a running nose.'
-		'(You) - Yes... Aachoo!'
-		'(Doctor) - Well, <<$pcs_nickname>>, please remove your clothes so i can examine you.'
+		'You walk back to the bedroom with the doctor. He sits on the edge of the bed and feels your forehead'
+		'"So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>. What are your symptoms?'
+		'"Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have sore throat - very sore actually - and a high temperature."'
+		'"And a nasty cough I see. And judging by your voice, also a running nose."'
+		'"Yes... Aachoo!!"'
+		'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, please remove your clothes so I can examine you."'
 
 		act 'Undress':
 			cla
@@ -465,15 +465,15 @@ $drPP = {
 			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You undressed and the doctor listens to your lungs for a while.'
-			'"Now lets take a look at your throat, open your mouth wide and say Ah."'
+			'You undres and the doctor listens to your lungs for a while.'
+			'"Now let''s take a look at your throat. Open your mouth wide and say Aahh."'
 
-			act 'A-a-a':
+			act 'Aahh':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp3.jpg"></center>'
 				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in.'
-				'(Doctor) - Mmmm... i see. Well, let''s take your temperature.'
+				'"Mmmm, I see. Well, let''s take your temperature."'
 
 				act 'Put the thermometer under your armpit':
 					cla
@@ -483,7 +483,7 @@ $drPP = {
 
 					act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
 						cla
-						'"You have the flu." He says "Nothing too serious, I''ll give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now roll over so I can give you the injection."'
+						'"You have the flu." he says "Nothing too serious, I''ll just give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now please roll over so I can give you the injection."'
 
 						act 'Roll over and lay on your stomach':
 							cla
@@ -493,10 +493,10 @@ $drPP = {
 							lekarstvo += 3
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp5.jpg"></center>'
-							'The doctor gives you a shot in the ass'
-							'(Doctor) - Remember stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest. When you feel better come by the clinic.'
-							'(You) - Thank you, Doctor, I will.'
-							'You escort the doctor to the entrace, he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door you head back to bed.'
+							'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass and injects the contents.'
+							'"Now remember. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest. When you feel better come by the clinic."'
+							'"Thank you, Doctor, I will."'
+							'You escort the doctor back to the entrace where he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door, you head back to bed.'
 
 							act 'Back to bed':gt 'bedr'
 						end
@@ -513,42 +513,42 @@ $polidin = {
 	minut += 15
 	callrand = rand(1, 3)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
-	'You dial the number of the clinic several times it''s always busy.'
+	'You dial the number of the clinic several times, but it''s always busy.'
 
 	act 'Call again and again':
 		cla
-		'Finally, a tired nurse''s voice answers. "Hello clinic."'
+		'Finally, a tired nurse''s voice answers. "Hello, this is the clinic. How can I help you?"'
 
 		act 'Hello ...':
 			cla
-			'"Hello. Can I get a house call?" You manage to say between coughing fits.'
+			'"Hello. Can I get a house call?" you manage to say between coughing fits.'
 			'The nurse asks. "Your name and address?"'
 
 			act 'Give address':
 				cla
-				'After coughing "Sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4 apartment 69." you manage before sneezing again.'
-				'The nurse responds. "One moment please." Then she puts you on hold.'
+				'You have a coughing fit before you''re able to answer. "Sorry, it''s <<$pcs_fistname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4, apartment 69." you manage before sneezing.'
+				'"One moment please." she responds before she puts you on hold.'
 
 				act 'Wait':
 					cla
 					minut += 5
 					clr
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You wait for five minutes, occasionally coughing and sneezing, until she finally returns. "So <<$pcs_lastname>> <<$pcs_nickname>>. What are your symptoms?'
+					'You wait for five minutes, occasionally coughing and sneezing, until she finally returns. "So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, what are your symptoms?"'
 					'You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry, I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
 					'"Is your temperature high?"'
-					'"Yes, quite so, 39.2°C" You tell her followed by a sneeze.'
-					'"Very well a doctor will come see you at home."'
+					'"Yes, quite so, 39.2°C" you tell her followed by a sneeze.'
+					'"Very well. A doctor will come see you at home."'
 					'"How soon?"'
-					'"As soon as one is free." She answers "Yours isn''t an isolated case"'
-					'"Thank you." You say'
+					'"As soon as one is free." she answers. "Yours isn''t an isolated case"'
+					'"Thank you." you respond.'
 
 					if ninelsex = 1:
-						act 'Is Ninel Pavlovna available?':
+						act 'Is Ninel available?':
 							cla
-							'"Is Doctor Ninel Pavlovna available? She is my regular doctor."'
-							'"Let me check" The nurse puts you on hold for a couple of minutes and then comes back on. "Yes she is free and will make the house call."'
-							'"Once again, thank you very much."'
+							'"Is Doctor Pavlovna available? She is my regular doctor."'
+							'"Let me check." The nurse puts you on hold for a couple of minutes and then comes back on. "Yes she is free and will make the house call."'
+							'"Once again, thank you very much." you reply.'
 
 							act 'Continue':gt 'housecall', 'ninel3'
 						end
@@ -561,7 +561,7 @@ $polidin = {
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 						timerand = rand(1, 6)
 						minut += timerand * 30
-						'You lie in bed, shivering wrapped in a blanket. Time drags by painfully slow, you can''t say, how much time passes before the doorbell rings.'
+						'You lie in bed, shivering while wrapped in a blanket. Time drags by painfully slow. You can''t say how much time passes before the doorbell rings.'
 
 						! WD: Uninitialised ~ 'ninel' use 'ninelmet'
 						act 'Answer the door':

locations/korrPar.qsrc

@@ -86,21 +86,21 @@ if blockBedrPar = 0:
 end
 if momloc = 1:
 	if (hour = 5 and minut > 30) or (hour = 6 and minut < 10):
-		'The door is closed. You know your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> is likely waking up your step father and getting dressed.'
+		'The door is closed. You know your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> is likely waking up your stepfather and getting dressed.'
 		act 'Knock on your parents'' door':
 			if hour = 6 and minut < 10 and rand(0,2) ! 0:
 				cla & *clr
 				minut += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/spy/peep3.jpg"></center>'
-				'You knock on the door and a few moments later your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> opens the door looking like she just woke up. "I don''t have time right now. Go wake up your brother." Then she closes the door.'
+				'You knock on the door and wait for a few minutes. Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> opens the door looking like she just woke up. "I don''t have time right now. Go wake up your brother." She then closes the door in your face.'
 				act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
 				act 'Go wake up Kolka':
 					cla & *clr
 					minut += 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/boy/kolka/sleeping.jpg"></center>'
-					'You walk down the hall and into the living room where you find Kolka sound asleep still on the couch.'
+					'You walk down the hall and into the living room where you find Kolka still sound asleep on the couch.'
 
 					!!act 'Shake him':gt '', ''
 					!!I am leaving the rest of this for Sicaa so he can tie in any events he has for kolka
@@ -113,9 +113,9 @@ if momloc = 1:
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/activities/spy/peep3.jpg"></center>'
 				if momvladroom = 1:
-					'You knock on the door and you hear your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> say, "<<$pcs_nickname>>? Is that you? Go set the table."'
+					'You knock on the door and you hear your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> say "<<$pcs_nickname>>? Is that you? Go set the table."'
 					*nl
-					'A moment of silence later, you faintly hear hushed voices and you <i>think</i> the sound of your mother giggling.'
+					'After a few minutes of silence, you faintly hear hushed voices and what you <i>think</i> is the sound of your mother giggling.'
 
 					act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
 					gs 'willpower', 'voyeur', 'self', 'medium'
@@ -130,7 +130,7 @@ if momloc = 1:
 						act 'Peek (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 					end
 				else
-					'You knock on the door and a few moments later your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> opens the door fully dressed, in the background you can see your step father starting to get out of bed. "I don''t have time right now. Go set the table for breakfast." Then she closes the door.'
+					'You knock on the door and wait for a few minutes. Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> opens the door fully dressed while your stepfather gets out of bed. "I don''t have time right now. Go set the table for breakfast." She then closes the door in your face.'
 					act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
 				end
 			end
@@ -183,7 +183,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 		npc_rel['A29'] -= 40
 		gs 'stat'
 		*pl $korrParMomHeader
-		'Your mother stands in the hallway waiting for you, clearly angry. As soon as she sees you, she grabs your ear and pinches it hard, making you wince in pain. "I just saw this video of you sucking some guy''s dick! What the hell were you thinking!? Your stepfather and I worked so hard to raise you properly, and then you do this. Do you realize that maybe this video was sent to others too? What will the people in town think of us now? I oughta teach you a lesson. What do you have to say for yourself!? Speak up!"'
+		'Your mother stands in the hallway waiting for you, clearly angry. As soon as she sees you, she grabs your ear and pinches it hard, making you wince in pain. "I just saw this video of you sucking some guy''s dick! What the hell were you thinking!? Your stepfather and I worked so hard to raise you properly, and then you do this. Do you realize that this video was sent to others too? What will the people in town think of us now? I should teach you a lesson. What do you have to say for yourself!? Speak up!"'
 
 		act 'Beg her to do nothing':
 			cla
@@ -206,9 +206,9 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/spank.jpg"></center>'
 			*nl
-			'You stand in the hallway staring at the floor, too embarrassed to say anything. What is there to say, anyway?'
+			'You stand in the hallway staring at the floor, too embarrassed to say anything.'
 			'Your mother grabs you by the arm and pulls you into the living room: "Take off your pants and bend over!" You shake your head, not liking where this is going at all. Getting even angrier by your refusal, she shouts: "Vladimir, come and hold her down!"'
-			'A few seconds later your stepfather enters the living room and immediately pulls you down and keeps you in place, while your mother pulls away your clothing. She then grabs a belt and starts to flog your bare ass with it, not holding back at all.'
+			'A few seconds later, your stepfather enters the living room and immediately pulls you down and keeps you in place while your mother pulls away your clothing. She then grabs a belt and starts to flog your bare ass with it, not holding back at all.'
 			'You take your punishment as good as you can, but towards the end you''re in tears and your cries are heard throughout the apartment. When it''s finally over, you raise your head just in time to catch the startled faces of your brother and sister in the doorway.'
 
 			act 'Stand up and straighten your clothes':gt $curloc
@@ -222,7 +222,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				*nl
-				'You slap away her hand with a defiant look in your eyes. "Oh, really? You''re no angel yourself either, <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>... does Dad know what YOU have been up to lately? Why don''t we go ask him, while we''re on this subject?"'
+				'You slap away her hand with a defiant look in your eyes. "Oh really? Well you''re no angel yourself either, <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>! Does Vladimir know what YOU have been up to lately? Why don''t we go ask him?"'
 				'Your mother looks at you furiously, but is at a loss for words. After a few seconds of awkward silence she storms off, slamming the door shut behind her.'
 
 				act 'Continue':gt $curloc
@@ -239,7 +239,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 		pcs_mood = 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		*pl $korrParMomHeader
-		'When you enter the hallway, you find your mother waiting there for you. "What''s all this I hear about a video of you sucking some guy''s dick? How could you be so careless, <<$pcs_nickname>>? You do realize this makes our whole family look bad..."'
+		'When you enter the hallway, you find your mother waiting there for you. "What''s all this I hear about a video of you sucking some guy''s dick? How could you be so careless <<$pcs_nickname>>? You do realize this makes our whole family look bad..."'
 
 		act 'Apologize':
 			cla
@@ -248,7 +248,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			npc_rel['A29'] -= 40
 			gs 'stat'
 			*nl
-			'"I don''t know what to say, <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>... I''m really sorry."'
+			'"I don''t know what to say <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>... I''m really sorry."'
 			'Your mother is clearly very upset with you. After a short discussion, she walks away.'
 
 			act 'Continue':gt $curloc
@@ -269,7 +269,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			GspravkaT = 2
 			motherKnowSpravka = 1
 			gs 'stat'
-			'"Oh, my darling, where have you been? We have been so worried."'
+			'"Oh my darling, where have you been? We have been so worried."'
 			'You go into the kitchen with your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and spend some time explaining what happened to you. Many of the details are difficult to talk about, and you cry and hug your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> as you tell your story.'
 			'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> tells you she will sort out everything with the school and makes you a bowl of chicken soup.'
 			if pcs_energy >= 30:
@@ -305,7 +305,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				SchoolBlock = 1
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades = 0
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. You have never seen her this furious. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? I just got off the phone with the school, they told me you didn''t show up yet again and expelled you. I''m extremely disappointed with you! I''ve warned you so many times! If you want to remain living in this house, you best start pulling your weight around here! Right now I want you out of the house, go out and find some work!" After that, she pushes you out the door and slams it shut in your face.'
+				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. You have never seen her this furious. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? I just got off the phone with the school. They told me you didn''t show up yet again and expelled you. I''m extremely disappointed with you! I''ve warned you so many times! If you want to remain living in this house, you best start pulling your weight around here! Right now I want you out of the house, go out and find some work!" After that, she pushes you out the door and slams it shut in your face.'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 				exit
@@ -314,13 +314,13 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				npc_rel['A29'] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades -= 40
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. She seems very angry with you. "School called, they said you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is the last straw for me, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, life is going to get a lot tougher for you, especially around here!" Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
+				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. She seems very angry with you. "The school called saying you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is your last chance <<$pcs_nickname>>. You will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, life is going to get a lot tougher for you, especially around here!" Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
 			elseif schoolPredupr = 0:
 				schoolPredupr = 1
 				npc_rel['A29'] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades -= 20
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? The school called, they said you weren''t at school today. You know they''re very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism, they said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
+				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? The school called saying you weren''t at school today. You know they''re very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism. They said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
 			end
 		elseif npc_rel['A29'] < 40:
 			if schoolPredupr = 2:
@@ -339,13 +339,13 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				npc_rel['A29'] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades -= 40
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. She seems very angry with you. "School called, they said you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is the last straw for me, <<$pcs_nickname>>. You will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, I will personally kick you out of the house. If you cannot be responsible and behave like a normal person, then get out, no one is forcing you to stay." Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
+				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. She seems very angry with you. "The school called saying you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is your last chance <<$pcs_nickname>>. You will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, I will personally kick you out of the house. If you cannot be responsible and behave like a normal person, then get out! No one is forcing you to stay." Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
 			elseif schoolPredupr = 0:
 				schoolPredupr = 1
 				npc_rel['A29'] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades -= 20
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? The school called, they said you weren''t at school today. You know they''re very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism, they said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
+				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? The school called saying you weren''t at school today. You know they''re very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism. They said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
 			end
 		end
 

locations/kuhrPar.qsrc

@@ -39,8 +39,8 @@ if momloc = 4:
 		minut += 5
 		gs'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/gotovka.jpg"></center>'
-		'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> turns to you. "<<$pcs_nickname>> please set the table for breakfast." You sigh and grab the dishes.'
-		act 'set the table for breakfast': gt 'kuhrPar'
+		'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> turns to you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, please set the table for breakfast." You sigh and grab the dishes.'
+		act 'Set the table for breakfast': gt 'kuhrPar'
 		exit
 	elseif momloc[1] = 4:
 		$mombreak = ''
@@ -59,10 +59,10 @@ elseif hour = 18 and minut <= 30 and indorf = 0 and anyaloc ! 25:
 elseif hour = 18 and minut <= 30 and indorf = 0:
 	'<a href="exec:gt''father''">Your stepfather</a>, <a href="exec:gt''mother''">mother</a> and <a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> are sitting at the table eating dinner. You could sit down and join them for dinner or just grab something and go.'
 else
-	'The kitchen is not very impressive, but it has everything your family needs. Since everyone can''t always join for family meals, <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> usually pre-cooks some meals and stores them in the fridge, to be handy for later. Of course, you could also just have a snack if you''re not that hungry.'
+	'The kitchen is not very impressive, but it has everything your family needs. Since everyone can''t always join for family meals, <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> usually pre-cooks some meals and stores them in the fridge. Of course, you could also just have a snack if you''re not that hungry.'
 end
 if momloc = 11: 'Your <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a> is here making diner.'
-if momloc = 13: 'Your <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a> is here cleaning up after diner.'
+if momloc = 13: 'Your <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a> is here cleaning up after dinner.'
 if momloc = 23: 'Your <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a> is here cleaning.'
 
 if hour = 7 and breakfast_day ! daystart and indorf = 0: 
@@ -73,22 +73,22 @@ if hour = 7 and breakfast_day ! daystart and indorf = 0:
 		breakfast_day = daystart
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/breakfasthome.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you sit down and join your family for breakfast, you step father asks. "How are you doing in school <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+		'As you sit down and join your family for breakfast, you stepfather asks. "How are you doing in school <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 		if kanikuli = 0 and StoryLine > 0 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and SchoolBlock = 0:
             if pcs_grades >= 80:
-                'You smile to him. "Really great, actually we was just learning something interesting the other day." You go on to talk about some of the stuff you have learned recently in school. He just nods, while you mother gives you a proud smile, Kolka just rolls his eyes.'
+                'You smile to him. "Really great. We were just learning something interesting the other day." You go on to talk about some of the stuff you have learned recently in school. He just nods, while you mother gives you a proud smile, Kolka just rolls his eyes.'
                 'The rest of breakfast is taken up with some small talk about what everyone has been up to of late, You thoroughly enjoy your breakfast with your family.'
             else
-                'You glance to him. "Um ok, I guess." You notice your mother frowning at you, so you quickly try to change the subject but they won''t let you. You do your best to make them think you are doing better than you are but neither seem to have bought it. Meanwhile Kolka snickers at you getting grilled.'
-                'The rest of breakfast is taken up with talk about how Kolka is doing in school whom seems to be doing better than you and is showered in praise from your mother and step father. The food is good even if the conversation wasn''t the best, you quickly finish your meal.'
+                'You glance to him. "Um ok, I guess." You notice your mother frowning at you, so you quickly try to change the subject, but they won''t let you. You do your best to make them think you are doing better than you are, but neither seem to have bought it. Kolka snickers at you getting grilled.'
+                'The rest of breakfast is taken up with talk about how Kolka is doing in school. He seems to be doing better than you and is showered with praise from your mother and stepfather. The food is good, even if the conversation wasn''t the best. You quickly finish your meal.'
             end
         else
             if kanikuli <> 0:
                 'You smile to him. "I am enjoying some time away from school to hang out with my friends. Just to relax for a change."'
-				'Then your mother speaks up. "It wouldn''t hurt you to study your school books and get ahead of your courses to get better grades." You roll your eye but before you can respond Vladamir lays on hand on your mother. "Let her enjoy herself this is her last year before she goes to the University." He adds with a little emphasis. You just sigh a little and not, as you both know that is what your mother wants.'
+				'Then your mother speaks up. "It wouldn''t hurt you to study your school books and get ahead of your courses to get better grades." You roll your eyes, but before you can respond, your stepfather lays his hand on your mother''s. "Let her enjoy herself. This is her last year before she goes to university after all." he says with a little emphasis. You just sigh and nod as you both know that is what your mother wants.'
             else 
-                'Vladamir looks over at you. "So have you found a cute boy that is head over heels in love with you, wanting to take you out on dates and buy you stuff yet?" He says in a slightly teasing tone. You mother smacks his arm. "She is to young for that, she needs to focus on school."'
-				'You start to try and answer but Kolka chimes in. "Like any boy would want to be seen with her." Which gets you to smack your brother on the arm and before long you are all bantering at the table.'
+                'Vladamir looks over at you. "So have you found a cute boy that is head over heels in love with you, wanting to take you out on dates and buy you stuff yet?" he says in a slightly teasing tone. You mother smacks his arm. "She is too young for that! She needs to focus on school."'
+				'You are about to answer, but Kolka chimes in. "Like any boy would want to be seen with her." This earns him a playful punch on the arm from you and before long, you are all bantering at the table.'
             end
         end
 		act 'Get up from the table': gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -101,24 +101,24 @@ elseif hour = 18 and minut <= 30 and dinner_day ! daystart and indorf = 0:
 		dinner_day = daystart
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/dinnerhome.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you sit down and join your family for dinner, you step father asks. "So <<$pcs_nickname>> do you have a boyfriend yet?"'
+		'As you sit down and join your family for dinner, you stepfather asks. "So <<$pcs_nickname>>, do you have a boyfriend yet?"'
 		if pav_slut > 150 and motherKnowSpravka = 0:
-			'You start to respond to him, when your mother interrupts. "Of course not, she is still too young to be thinking about boys."'
-			'Then Kolka adds under his breath. "Like any boy would date her, when she sucks them all off anyways."'
-			'You mother turns towards Kolka. "That''s not funny apologize to your sister right now, right now!" Anya just smirks at that.'
-			'Kolka freezes in place, seeing that she is pissed he decides he doesn''t want to be the one to tell her about your reputation and says. "Sorry."'
-			'Your step father clears his throat and quickly changes the subject talking about how his work went. After that you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
+			'You start to respond to him when your mother interrupts. "Of course not! She is still too young to be thinking about boys."'
+			'Koka then chimes in. "Like any boy would date her when she sucks them all off anyways."'
+			'You mother turns towards Kolka. "That''s not funny! Apologize to your sister right now! Right now!" Anya just smirks.'
+			'Kolka freezes in place, but seeing that she is pissed he decides he doesn''t want to be the one to tell her about your reputation and just says. "Sorry."'
+			'Your stepfather clears his throat and quickly changes the subject, talking about how his work went. After that, you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
 		elseif pav_slut > 150:
-			'You start to respond to him, when your mother interrupts. "She is two young to worry about that and ... we talked about it." She gives you a meaningful glance and you shut your mouth.'
-			'Then Kolka adds under his breath. "Like any boy would date her, when she sucks them all off anyways."'
-			'You mother turns towards Kolka. "That''s not funny." Then she glances at you for a moment. "She might have made some mistakes but she is trying to be a better girl now. Now apologize to your sister right now, right now!" Anya just smirks at that.'
+			'You start to respond to him when your mother interrupts. "She is too young to worry about that and ... we talked about it." She gives you a meaningful glance and you shut your mouth.'
+			'Kolka then chimes in. "Like any boy would date her when she sucks them all off anyways."'
+			'You mother turns towards Kolka. "That''s not funny." Then she glances at you. "She might have made some mistakes, but she is trying to be a better girl now. Now apologize to your sister right now!" Anya just smirks.'
 			'Kolka freezes in place. "Sorry."'
-			'Your step father clears his throat and quickly changes the subject talking about how his work went. After that you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
+			'Your stepfather clears his throat and quickly changes the subject, talking about how his work went. After that, you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
 		else
-			'You start to respond to him, when your mother interrupts. "Of course not, she is still to young to be thinking about boys."'
-			'Your step father sighs a little. "She is old enough to start dating dear."'
-			'You mother gives him a hard look. "No she isn''t she needs to focus on school and then going to the University before she can start thinking about boys."'
-			'You step father decides to drop it and start talking about some of the stuff that happened at his work. All and all you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
+			'You start to respond to him when your mother interrupts. "Of course not, she is still too young to be thinking about boys."'
+			'Your stepfather sighs a little. "She is old enough to start dating dear."'
+			'You mother gives him a hard look. "No, she isn''t. She needs to focus on school and then going to the University before she can start thinking about boys."'
+			'You stepfather decides to drop it and start talking about some of the stuff that happened at his work. All and all, you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
 		end
 		
 		act 'Get up from the table': gt $loc, $loc_arg

locations/vann.qsrc

@@ -39,14 +39,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brit1':
     $location_type = 'event'
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/brit1.jpg"></center>'
-	'While you applied shaving foam to your pubis in the bath, a guy comes in. You were so engrossed in what you were doing that you didn''t notice it, and only when he turned on the electric shaver he plugged in, did you look up and see him standing in front of you with a smile while you treated your crotch. A few seconds later, he looks up at your face and says, "Hey, do you mind that I''m in here to shave?" and noticing your inept movements, while you continue to apply shaving foam on your pussy, he adds, "I can help, if you want. I have an older sister who was supposed to get married four years ago. Her groom used to help her shave but he fled while she was pregnant. I took over that role and I''m pretty good at it." You can''t help but imagine this hunk of a man at thirteen, squatting in front of a pregnant woman and shaving her pussy. It was probably his first sexual experience.'
+	'As you apply shaving foam to your pubis in the bath, a guy comes in. You are so engrossed in what you are doing that you didn''t notice him. Only when he turns on the electric shaver he plugged in do you look up and see him standing in front of you with a smile as you take care of your crotch. A few seconds later, he looks up at your face and says "Hey, do you mind that I''m in here to shave?" Noticing your inept movements as you continue to apply shaving foam to your pussy, he adds "I can help if you want. I have an older sister who was supposed to get married four years ago. Her fiance used to help her shave, but he fled while she was pregnant. I took over that role and I''m pretty good at it." You can''t help but imagine this hunk of a man at thirteen, squatting in front of a pregnant woman and shaving her pussy. It was probably his first sexual experience.'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'resist', 'easy'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 		act 'Scream (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 			cla
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
-			'You yelled so that you probably even on the street could be heard. "Do not you cry, I wanted to just help, and generally have to close the door." He tried to reassure you, but you only cried out. He had no choice as to jump out of the bathroom and run.'
+			'You yell so loud that you are probably heard out on the street. "Don''t cry, I wanted to just help! Lock the door next time." He tries to reassure you, but you just keep yelling at him. He has no choice but to flee the bathroom.'
 			'You quickly finish shaving.'
 
 			act 'Finish':gt 'vann', 'start'
@@ -59,41 +59,41 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brit1':
 		*clr & cla
 		pcs_horny += 10
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/brit2.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Go ahead," you reply and you go back to the task of trying to shave your pussy. A few minutes later, you hear the hum of his electric razor die. You look up to see him watching you.'
-		'"No no no," he shrieks, "You''re doing it wrong." He says in frustration and grabs the disposable razor from you. You stare at him in stunned silence as he sits down in front of you. He is staring right at your cream covered vagina.'
-		'"Hair is meant to be shaved in a specific direction." He points it out by saying, "You do it the other way and you''re liable to get ingrown hairs. Those are painful."'
+		'"Go ahead..." you reply and you go back to the task of trying to shave your pussy. A few minutes later, you hear the hum of his electric razor die. You look up to see him watching you.'
+		'"No no no!" he shrieks. "You''re doing it wrong." he says in frustration and grabs the disposable razor from you. You stare at him in stunned silence as he sits down in front of you. He is staring right at your foam covered vagina.'
+		'"Hair is meant to be shaved in a specific direction. Do it the wrong way and you''re liable to get ingrown hairs. Those are painful."'
 		'You keep quiet while looking at the concentration on his face. You occasionally see his tongue stick out his mouth when he gets to a particularly tough section.'
-		'"Did you help shave your sister often," you ask.'
+		'"Did you help shave your sister often?" you ask.'
 		act 'You ask him':
 			*clr & cla
 			pcs_horny += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/brit2.jpg"></center>'
-			'He looks back up at you with a start. He''d been concentrating so hard on your pussy that he completely forgot that you existed.'
-			'"Uh…," he shakes his head, "Yes, I did. At first she was very nervous and only used to call me in once every two weeks, but her confidence grew. Eventually I shaved her every two days or so. She only had stubble at that point so I basically just had to run it through with a razor. Although I could still feel her tiny bristles on my finger." He pauses when he realizes he blurted out too much.'
-			'"That was kind of you. Not everyone would be helping their sister with such a delicate matter." You continue pretending that nothing is wrong with either you getting shaved by a stranger or with what he said.'
+			'He looks back up at you. He''d been concentrating so hard on your pussy that he completely forgot that you existed.'
+			'"Uh..." He nods his head. "Yes, I did. At first, she was very nervous and only used to call me in once every two weeks, but her confidence grew. Eventually, I shaved her every two days or so. She only had stubble at that point so I basically just had to run it through with a razor. Although I could still feel her tiny bristles on my finger." He pauses when he realizes he blurted out too much.'
+			'"That was kind of you. Not everyone would be helping their sister with such a delicate matter." you continue, pretending that nothing is wrong with either you getting shaved by a stranger or with what he said.'
 			*nl
-			'"It wasn''t as easy as you make it out to be. I practically had to beg her to be able to do it. She is a strong woman." You can hear the admiration in his voice when he talks about her. "I couldn''t just leave her. She didn''t have anyone else, so I felt it was my duty, as her brother, to look after her. I bathed her, clothed her, shaved, and showered her. I even helped her give birth to a beautiful baby girl." You keep looking down at him throughout his rambling and notice that as he fawns over his sister a bulge grows in his shorts.'
+			'"It wasn''t as easy as you make it out to be. I practically had to beg her to be able to do it. She is a strong woman." You can hear the admiration in his voice when he talks about her. "I couldn''t just leave her. She didn''t have anyone else, so I felt it was my duty, as her brother, to look after her. I bathed her, clothed her, shaved and showered her. I even helped her give birth to a beautiful baby girl." You keep looking down at him throughout his rambling and notice that as he fawns over his sister, a bulge grows in his shorts.'
 			'You get a naughty idea. "Did you just touch her or did you get a taste?" you ask suddenly.'
 			act 'Naughty question':
 				*clr & cla
 				pcs_horny += 10
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/brit2.jpg"></center>'
-				'"Both." He says nonchalantly until he realizes what he just admitted to. You see his face turn red. You smile because you are pleased that you managed to get him to reveal something embarrassing about himself.'
-				'"Oh?" You cock your head to the side, your mischievous smile persisting, "Did she return the favour or did she let poor little you do all that work with no pay," you ask while being playfully sympathetic.'
+				'"Both." he says nonchalantly until he realizes what he just admitted to. You see his face turn red. You smile, pleased that you managed to get him to reveal something embarrassing about himself.'
+				'"Oh?" You cock your head to the side, your mischievous smile persisting. "Did she return the favour or did she let poor little you do all that work with no pay?" you ask while being playfully sympathetic.'
 				*nl
-				'His face gets even redder, looking like a lobster, but then he looks up. "Motivation." He says quickly, "I didn''t really know how to shave her well back then. One day my hands were shaking so much that they slipped. I saw the blood and just ran. I was actually surprised the next day when she called me inside the bathroom. I thought she was going to hit me, but she let me shave her again. She showed me how to do it right. Afterwards, she pulled down my shorts and took me into her mouth. When the shower was over she told me that every time did it right she''d repay me in kind."'
-				'"Did you fuck," you ask by outright voicing your perverted thoughts. You''re so engrossed in his story that you forget about the razor that he''s shaving your foamy slit with.'
+				'His face gets even redder, looking like a lobster, but then he looks up. "Motivation." he says quickly. "I didn''t really know how to shave her well back then. One day my hands were shaking so much that they slipped. I saw the blood and just ran. I was actually surprised the next day when she called me inside the bathroom. I thought she was going to hit me, but she let me shave her again. She showed me how to do it right. Afterwards, she pulled down my shorts and took me into her mouth. When the shower was over, she told me that every time I did it right, she''d repay me in kind."'
+				'"Did you fuck!" you say, outright voicing your perverted thoughts. You''re so engrossed in his story that you forget about the razor that he''s shaving your foamy slit with.'
 				act 'Did you have sex':
 					*clr & cla
 					pcs_horny += 10
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/brit2.jpg"></center>'
-					'This time, he looked like a tomato, but you saw him shake his head vigorously to get rid of it. After all, he''d already told you as much as he had why not the whole story? "We did," he continued, "She became…," he clears his throat, "quite active… when she was in her third trimester and blew me at least three times a day. I noticed one day that she was touching herself while she took my cock in her mouth. One day I asked about it. She told me that even pregnant women have needs. I asked if I could help. She told me to get the bottle of lube from her room." His eyes were far away as he recalled his first time. "When I returned, I found her massaging her asshole. I wondered out loud why we weren''t having... you know," he shrugs, "normal sex. She said that we were brother and sister, so we shouldn''t do it that way."' 
+					'This time, he looks like a tomato, but you see him shake his head vigorously to get rid of it. After all, he''d already told you as much as he had, so why not the whole story? "We did." he continues. "She became..." he clears his throat. "quite active when she was in her third trimester and blew me at least three times a day. I noticed one day that she was touching herself while she took my cock in her mouth and I asked about it. She told me that even pregnant women have needs. I asked if I could help and she told me to get the bottle of lube from her room." His eyes are far away as he recalls his first time. "When I returned, I found her massaging her asshole. I wondered out loud why we weren''t having... you know," he shrugs "normal sex. She said that we were brother and sister, so we shouldn''t do it that way."' 
 					'He paused.'
 					*nl
-					'"So then…,” you ask impatiently while being curious as to what he did to his sister. You get a little wet yourself which is something which doesn''t escape his notice.'
-					'He rubs your clit a little before continuing, "I rubbed a lot of lube onto her sphincter before gently easing my dick into her ass. She yelled out, but I could see that she wasn''t in pain and I continued. She started shaking her ass at me while moaning out loud as she rode my cock. I didn''t last long with her moaning like that. I came deep inside her, but she kept riding me until I was spent. I was exhausted and I loved it. Eventually, we stopped doing the blowjobs altogether and I kept fucking her ass every day. By the time she gave birth we''d already done the Karma Sutra on her ass and she had this beautiful gape." He had drawn such vivid picture for you that you were leaking pussy juice all over his hand while he shaved you.'
-					'He raises his hand to his lips and licks it off before getting up, "Well, I''m finished," he says that leaves you with an ache in your loins.'
-					'"Any other problems you''d like me to look at," he asks and you can see the same mischievous smirk on his face that you''d had earlier.'
+					'"So then???" you ask impatiently while being curious as to what he did to his sister. You get a little wet yourself, which doesn''t escape his notice.'
+					'He rubs your clit a little before continuing. "I rubbed a lot of lube onto her anus before gently easing my dick into her ass. She yelled out, but I could see that she wasn''t in pain and I continued. She started shaking her ass at me while moaning out loud as she rode my cock. I didn''t last long with her moaning like that. I came deep inside her, but she kept riding me until I was spent. I was exhausted and I loved it. Eventually, we stopped doing the blowjobs altogether and I kept fucking her ass every day. By the time she gave birth we''d already done the Karma Sutra on her ass and she had this beautiful gape." He has drawn such vivid picture for you that you are leaking pussy juice all over his hand while he shaves you.'
+					'He raises his hand to his lips and licks it off before getting up. "Well, I''m finished." he says, leaving you with an ache in your loins.'
+					'"Any other problems you''d like me to look at?" he asks and you can see the same mischievous smirk on his face that you''d had earlier.'
 					gs 'willpower', 'cuni', 'resist', 'easy'
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 						act 'No thanks (<<will_cost>> Willpower)': gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist' & gt 'vann', 'start'
@@ -104,8 +104,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'brit1':
 						*clr & cla
 						picrand = 74
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/brit3.jpg"></center>'
-						'"Come on, and that will shave, my chest hair does not grow." you said'
-						'"Well, I''m now your whole body check" With these words, he began to put foam on you, smearing it all over your body. His hands slid over you, you melted at his touch and when he slid to your current pussy already being almost finished.'
+						'"Well at least you only have to shave your face." you say with a laugh.'
+						'"I''m going to shave you smooth now." he replies. With these words, he begins to lather you with foam, smearing it all over your body. His hands slide over you and you melt at his touch. His hand soon slides over your freshly shaved pussy.'
 						act 'Continue':gt 'sex', 'kuni'
 					end
 				end
@@ -118,19 +118,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v1':
     $location_type = 'event'
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v0.jpg"></center>'
-	'You enter into the bathroom and see a girl sitting on the edge of the bath tub smearing her feet with cream.'
+	'You enter the bathroom and see a girl sitting on the edge of the bathtub smearing her feet with cream.'
 	'"Oops... Sorry, I''ll come back later." you say and turn to leave.'
-	'"Weel, no... It''s okay, you can stay, I''m almost finished." she says with a smile. You come back and go to the sink to wash your hands to keep yourself busy until she leaves. But she seems not to be in a hurry and, a couple of minutes later, she asks "Do you want your feet smeared too?"'
+	'"No, it''s okay, you can stay. I''m almost finished." she says with a smile. You go to the sink to wash your hands, keeping yourself busy until she leaves. However, she seems not to be in a hurry and a couple of minutes later, she asks "Do you want your feet done too?"'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'foreplay', 'resist', 'easy'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 		act 'Refuse (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 			cla
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
-			'"Ehm... No, thank you... Not really." You reply.'
-			'"Well, as you want... Your loss" She says with a wink and, after a while, she finally finishes and leaves.'
+			'"Ehm... No, thank you... Not really." you reply.'
+			'"Your loss." she says with a wink and, after a while, she finally finishes and leaves.'
 
-			act 'To do their job':gt 'vann', 'start'
+			act 'Continue':gt 'vann', 'start'
 		end
 	else
 		act 'Refuse (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
@@ -140,8 +140,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v1':
 		*clr & cla
 		picrand = 21
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v1.jpg"></center>'
-		'"Well... Why not?" You say. She smiles and begins to put the cream on your feet. Her hands stroke your ankles, gradually making their way up to your thighs and hips and then to your buttocks. She stops there longer then on any other part of your legs, her hands wqueeze your ass for a while, then they find their way to the inside of your thighs and her fingers reach your pussy. This start happening always more often. When you slightly open your legs to facilitate her action, she keeps one hand there, massaging your pussy, while the other continues to stroke your ass cheeks. Suddenly you will feel on your feet not only her hands, but her lips too. She kissed your feet again moving upwards, and soon her tongue slides between your buttocks and reaches down to your pussy.'
-
+		'"Well, why not?" you reply. She smiles and begins to apply the cream to your feet. Her hands stroke your ankles, before gradually making their way up to your thighs and hips, and then to your buttocks. She stops there longer then on any other part of your legs, her hands gently squeeze your ass for a while.' 
+		'They then find their way to the inside of your thighs and her fingers reach your pussy. When you part your legs slightly, she keeps one hand between your legs massaging your pussy while the other returns to kneading your ass cheek. You squirm as you suddenly feel a tingle on your foot and look down to see her kissing your foot. She starts moving upwards, kissing your leg until her tongue slides between your thighs to your pussy.'
+        
 		act 'Proceed':gt 'lezbsex', 'kuni'
 	end
 end
@@ -150,7 +151,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v2':
     $location_type = 'event'
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You went into the bathroom and turned to the sink to wash steel, Soon you heard behind what that strange sound. Realizing that you are not in the bathroom alone, you turned sharply and see Man standing in a bath towel around his neck. He palilsya your ass and masturbated you even a little flattered that he masturbates looking at you. He continued to selflessly masturbate unnoticed that you look at it, a few seconds later, he finally noticed and tried to cover with a towel, went to the door, muttering something under his breath, apparently it was apologies.'
+	'You walk into the bathroom and wash your hands at the sink. You suddenly hear a noise behind and realizing that you are not in the bathroom alone, you turn sharply and see a guy standing in the bath with a towel around his neck, masturabating. He continues masturbating, seemingly unaware of your presence. A few seconds later, he finally notices and tries to cover himself with his towel. He scurries towards the door, muttering an apology under his breath.'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'hj', 'self'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -159,10 +160,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v2':
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 			picrand = 75
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v3.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Let me help you" escaped you. The guy paused and finally said something articulate - "What?" you podozhli him in full and running his hand under his towel groped dildo. The guy relaxed and removed the towel, you meanwhile, dropped to a crouch and took his penis in his hand began to stroke it, then led by the hand up and down. He began to moan.'
+			'"Let me help you..." you say sweetly. The guy pauses. "What?" he replies. You walk up to him and slide your hand under his towel, slowly jerking his cock in your hand. The guy relaxes and drops his towel as you drop to your knees and and keep stroking his shaft. He begins to moan in pleasure.'
 
-			act 'Writing lick':gt 'sex', 'kuni'
-			act 'Take by mouth':gt 'sex', 'minet'
+			act 'Get your pussy eaten':gt 'sex', 'kuni'
+			act 'Give him a blowjob':gt 'sex', 'minet'
 
 			act 'Continue':
 				*clr & cla
@@ -173,9 +174,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v2':
 				spafinloc = 11
 				gs 'cum_manage'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v4.jpg"></center>'
-				'You continued to work with his hands, a minute later the guy sat on the edge of the bed and then lay down. You actin continued to wield two-handed, and judging by his moans happy he liked it. Once you''ve started thinking about what would caress his hands not only as a member in your hands began to twitch. "Damn, " you said, and immediately realized that nothing opened his mouth, pulled out his penis and flew jet of sperm you right in the face, and some got in my mouth. "Damn, you and skorostrel." told you spitting sperm. "Sorry, " mumbled and quickly gathered guy jumped out of the bathroom.'
+				'You continue to stroke his shaft. The guy lies down on the edge of the bathtub and you start jerking him with both hands which, judging by his moans, you think he likes. You start thinking about how his cock would feel inside you when it begins to twitch in your hands and a stream of cum splatters across your face, some landing in your open mouth. "Damn it, you fucking asshole! Warn me next time!" you yell at him. "Sorry... " is all he mumbles as he quickly grabs his towel and runs out of the bathroom.'
 
-				act 'To do their job':gt 'vann', 'start'
+				act 'Continue':gt 'vann', 'start'
 			end
 		end
 	else
@@ -189,19 +190,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v3':
     $location_type = 'event'
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v5.jpg"></center>'
-	'You literally fly into the bathroom and seated on the toilet. "Wow, still a little, and just peed" you thought with relief, but then you realize that edge you have someone else here, turning his head, you see a guy washable. He stands smiling and says, "Hi."'
-	'"Hi, " you reply, trying pridamat something to say. "Sorry, I just have to" finally you say.'
-	'"Yes, I hear very, judging by the sound for a long time, very necessary." he says, laughing. Of you still pouring down, you''re ready to sink into the ground, but can not stand. Meanwhile man climbs out of the bathroom and stood up in front of you starts to silently watch and you see his cock medleno but surely increasing. Soon he is worth and he makes a small step forward, now his dildo literally inches from your face. He shakes them a bit from your lips, clearly hinting at a blowjob. Finally it bothers you and you start talking intending to say something he would put it away from your face. But as soon as you open your mouth, as he immediately makes dvischenie pelvis and his dildo is in your mouth.'
-	'"Sorry, but I am also very necessary." he said still smiling.'
+	'Not bothering to check if anyone is present, you run into the bathroom and quickly sit on the toilet. "Just in time..." you think to yourself with relief. You then realize that someone else is here. Turning your head, you see a guy in the shower. He stands there, smiling. "Hello there."'
+	'"Hi..." you reply with an awkward grin as your cheeks flush bright red. "Sorry, I just have to...." you continue.'
+	'"Yes, yes. Of course. Nature calls when she calls!" he says, laughing. You continue urinating, ready to sink into the ground in embarrassment. Meanwhile, the guy climbs out of the shower and stands in front of you, silently watching. You see his impressively sized cock getting hard and soon enough, he is as hard as a rock, his dick inches from your face. He brings it close to your lips, clearly hinting at a blowjob. Feeling uncomfortable, you are about to ask him to step back, but as soon as you open your mouth, he shoves his cock inside.'
+	'"Sorry, but nature calls." he says, smiling.'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'bj', 'resist'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 		act 'Bite (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 			cla
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
-			'You squeeze teeth and covered his head with his hands, that would not prilitelo. He starts screaming and swearing, nazavaya you these words, the value of which you can not even imagine, then you squeeze even more teeth. He was no longer screaming and begging poskulivaet only release, you can see he beat podoyalsya, fearing that may remain without any member. You decompress teeth and the guy runs out into the hallway, in the buff, showering curses you.'
+			'You clamp your teeth down on his fleshy tip and he starts screaming and swearing, shouting words that are incredibly vulgar. You bite even harder and he screams even louder, thinking you''re about to bite his dick off. You release him from your grip and he runs out into the hallway nude, screaming even more vulgar curses at you.'
 
-			act 'To do their job': gt 'vann', 'start'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'vann', 'start'
 		end
 	else
 		act 'Bite (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
@@ -212,14 +213,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v3':
 		*clr
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 3, 'deepthroat', 'rough'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v6.jpg"></center>'
-		'You began gently licking the head and hand massage testicles. The guy started to moan, and then he grabbed your head with both hands, legs wide apart and planted your head so that the term immediately flew down your throat, you began to choke and popytalalis away, but his hand firmly held your head. Soon he relaxed hand, you began to suck his cock swallowing himself. A few minutes later he took a member of your mouth and lift you off the toilet, turned and put the cancer.'
+		'You begin gently licking the head and massaging his testicles. He starts to moan and grabs your head with both hands and shoves his dick down your throat. You begin to choke and gag, but his hand keeps a firm grip on your head. He eventually relaxes his grip and you begin to deepthroat him. A few minutes later, he pulls out of your mouth and pulls you to your feet. He turns you around and bends you over the toilet.'
 
 		act 'Continue':
 			cla
 			*clr
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 6, 'rough', 'sub', 'humiliation'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v7.jpg"></center>'
-			'He put his penis in your vagina, and started with the power to penetrate into you, his movements were strong and deep. You do not have time podtiretsya after pee and now drops of urine running down your thighs. You looked down on the toilet and you head climbed thought "What am I doing, fuck me in an almost public toilet, I''m cancer over the toilet full of urine and on my own leg drains urine from behind a complete stranger jerk fucks me like a cheap whore. Horror I sat down, and the most disgusting thing I like how he does it. " These thoughts all your excitement vanished and you just stood and waited as he sated. Soon he pulled out of you penis and commanded that you dropped on the floor.'
+			'He inserts his penis into your vagina and starts to fuck you, his thrusts strong and deep. You didn''t have time to wipe and urine is trickling down your leg. "What am I doing? I''m getting fucked like a cheap whore in the dorm bathroom, bent over the toilet as urine runs down my leg. Yet, the most disgusting part is that I like it!" you think to yourself as you just stand there, letting this guy just thrust in and out of you. Soon he pulls out and tells you to get on your knees.'
 
 			act 'Sit on the floor':
 				cla
@@ -236,11 +237,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v3':
 				spafinloc = 15
 				gs 'cum_manage'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v8.jpg"></center>'
-				'You fell to the floor, until you sit down with you, he pulled a T-shirt.'
-				'"Mouth open, now finished, " he said nayarivaya his dick hand. You opened your mouth and you splattered sperm bay you chest and face, in my mouth got a few drops that you spat.'
-				'"Well, thank you, to me it lacked." said the guy dressed and walked out, leaving you on the floor all in the semen, "That ran pee" you thought.'
+				'You tuen and drop to your knees in front of him as he starts jerking his cock above your face.'
+				'"Open wide!" You open your mouth and his cum splatters across your face, tits and tongue.'
+				'"Well, thank you, but you were..lacking something." he says as he gets dressed and walks out, leaving you on the floor covered in his cum. "Fucking asshole!" you whisper to yourself as you stand up.'
 
-				act 'To do their job':gt 'vann', 'start'
+				act 'Continue':gt 'vann', 'start'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -253,8 +254,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v4':
 	stat['mast'] += 1
 	if pcs_inhib < 30:inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v9.jpg"></center>'
-	'You have spray water from the faucet directly onto your pussy and tight jet of warm water begins to caress you. Getting further into it, you push your fingers inside while the water takes care of your clit. You''re completely absorbed in your masturbation until suddenly you realize that someone has turned on the faucet in the sink. Opening your eyes, you see a guy standing at the sink, looking at you and grinning.'
-	'"Sorry, don''t let me interrupt, I''m just enjoying the show" he says without looking away from your pussy, which is still filled with your fingers.'
+	'You spray water from the faucet directly onto your pussy and let the jet of warm water caress you. Getting further into it, you push your fingers inside you pussy while the water takes care of your clit. You''re completely absorbed in your masturbation until you hear someone turned on the faucet in the sink. Opening your eyes, you see a guy standing at the sink, looking at you and grinning.'
+	'"Sorry, don''t let me interrupt. I''m just enjoying the show!" he says without looking away from your pussy, your fingers still tightly jammed inside it.'
 
 	gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self'
 	if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -263,9 +264,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v4':
 			gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 			pcs_horny = 0
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v10.jpg"></center>'
-			'You scream so loud that you hurt your ears. The guy jumps at the sound and hurriedly retreats from the bathroom. You are once again left alone, but the excitement is gone and you don''t really feel like masturbating anymore.'
+			'You scream so loud that you hurt your ears. The guy jumps and hurriedly retreats from the bathroom. You are once again left alone, but the excitement is gone and you don''t really feel like masturbating anymore.'
 
-			act 'To do their job':gt 'vann', 'start'
+			act 'Continue':gt 'vann', 'start'
 		end
 	else
 		act 'Scream (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
@@ -274,7 +275,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v4':
 	act 'Cover up':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v10.jpg"></center>'
-		'You began to slowly crawl from the bathroom, covering your naked pussy, soapy water, and tried to close the chest hand that you do not really succeed. The guy kept watch over you and his smile grew wider, and then you realize that your hand is still stroking your pussy and his eyes only excites you. Making an effort you took the hand. He walked up to you and sat on the edge of the tub, lifted out of the water loofah handed to you, "Can I help you? ... I mean back rub, " he said. You sat and stared blankly at him not knowing what to say, and his hands were pulled down again.'
+		'You instictively cover your naked pussy and unsuccessfully try to cover your breasts with your other hand. The guy just keeps watching you and his smile grows wider. You realize that your hand is still stroking your pussy and his gaze only excites you further. You remove your hand from your crotch and he walks up and sits on the edge of the tub. He lifts a loofah out of the water and hands it to you. "Can I help you?... I mean with washing your back?" he asks. You sit and stare blankly at him, not knowing what to say.'
 
 		gs 'willpower', 'foreplay', 'resist', 'easy'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -282,8 +283,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v4':
 				*clr & cla
 				gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v10.jpg"></center>'
-				'"No, thank you" barely squeezed you out of yourself.'
-				'"Well, as you want" a guy turned around and went to the door, on the threshold he turned "Would you shut the door, and then there is a different contingent hangs out." and walked out.'
+				'"No, thank you." you reply.'
+				'"As you wish." he says and turns around, heading to the door. On the threshold, he turns. "You should lock the door in future. Some guys are... more inclined to ''help you.''" he quips before walking away.'
 
 				act 'To do their job':gt 'vann', 'start'
 			end
@@ -295,9 +296,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'v4':
 			*clr & cla
 			picrand = 76
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/island/university/dorm/sex/bathroom/v11.jpg"></center>'
-			'You nodded in agreement, and he immediately threw off everything and you got into the bath. He began to rub your body sponge, soon joined her and his other hand, she glided over your body, caressing his chest, then down to her pussy below. Worth his fingers touch your pussy as you shuddered and clung to him all over, his erection caught between your buttocks. He began to move up, down, and you slightly caved giving him room to maneuver, but he did not enter into you, and put his hands on your shoulders and gently pressed, you will immediately understand what he wants, knelt down and turned to face him. Here was his throbbing dildo, you took it in hand and to right in his mouth.'
+			'You nod and he immediately strips off and climbs into the bath with you. He begins to rub your loofah, along with his free hand, over your body, caressing your chest before sliding down to your pussy. His fingers gently caress your pussy and you shudder and cling to him, his erection griding between your ass cheeks. He begins to slide up and down and you lean forward, giving him room to maneuver. However, he doesn''t penetrate you, instead placing his hands on your shoulders and gently pushing you down. You understand what he wants and turn to face him. You lean down and suck on his balls before licking his shaft from base to tip.'
 
-			act 'Take by mouth':gt 'sex', 'minet'
+			act 'Give him a blowjob':gt 'sex', 'minet'
 		end
 	end
 end

locations/vanr.qsrc

@@ -25,11 +25,11 @@ gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 
 if remvanr = 0:
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/vanr.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your bathroom is old and in a bad state, the suite is unattractive and stained but at least the <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a> is reasonably new. '
+	'Your bathroom is old and in a bad state. The suite is unattractive and stained, but at least the <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a> is reasonably new.'
 	'Your ' + iif(pcs_hairbsh = 0,'<a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''brush''">brush</a>','brush') + ' sits on the small shelf, below the mirror.'
 elseif remvanr = 1:
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/bathroom/vanr2.jpg"></center>'
-	'Your bathroom is new and in good condition, the suite is modern, your <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a> is perfect and everything looks clean and fresh.'
+	'Your bathroom is new and in good condition. The suite is modern, your <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a> is perfect and everything looks clean and fresh.'
 	'Your ' + iif(pcs_hairbsh = 0,'<a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''brush''">brush</a>','brush') + ' sits on the small shelf, below the mirror.'
 end
 

locations/vanr2x.qsrc

@@ -17,7 +17,7 @@ gs'stat'
 gs 'themes', 'indoors'
 '<center><b><font color = maroon>Bathroom</font></b></center>'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/oldtown/apartment/vanr2x.jpg"></center>'
-'Above the sink hangs a <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a>, where you can ' + iif(pcs_hairbsh = 0,'<a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''brush''">brush</a>','brush') + ' your hair.'
+'A <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''start''">mirror</a>, hangs above the sink where you can ' + iif(pcs_hairbsh = 0,'<a href="exec:gt ''mirror'',''brush''">brush</a>','brush') + ' your hair.'
 
 gs 'din_van', 'private'
 gs 'din_van', 'misery'