Cleaned up text at school

locations/fbgameout.qsrc

@@ -7,13 +7,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	gs 'stat'
 	if grupTipe ! 2:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/start.jpg"></center>'
-		'Walking next to the school yard you''ve noticed that most of the ''jocks'' have gathered here. They look like are going to play some football, a few of them acknowledge you but none of them wave you over.'
+		'Walking next to the school yard, you notice that most of the jocks have gathered here and look like they''re going to play some football. A few of them acknowledge you, but none of them wave you over.'
 		act 'Sit and watch them':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 30
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/watching.jpg"></center>'
-			'You take a seat on the ground near the field and watch the jocks play football. Most of them are pretty competitive really pushing it to try and win. Occasionally there is some arguments about a foul, but for the most part they get along and have fun. You have to admit it looks pretty fun, maybe you could ask to join them one day.'
+			'You take a seat on the ground near the field and watch the jocks play football. Most of them are pretty competitive and are really pushing it to try and win. There are some occasional arguments about a foul, but for the most part they get along and have fun. You have to admit it looks pretty fun, and think that you should ask to join them one day.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'gschool_grounds', 'main' 
 		end
 		act 'Ask to join':
@@ -22,31 +22,31 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			grupvalue[2] += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/asking.jpg"></center>'
-			'You walk over to them. "Hey guys, what are you doing?"'
-			'Several of them turn towards you, Lazar replies: "About to divide up into teams and play, you can watch if you want."'
-			'"Well could I join you instead?" You ask.'
-			'They glance among each other before Lazar replies: "Maybe some other time <<$pcs_nickname>>." Then they start picking teams.'
+			'You walk over and greet them. "Hey guys, what are you doing?"'
+			'Several of them turn towards you and Lazar replies. "We''re about to divide up into teams and play. You can watch if you want."'
+			'"Could I join instead?" you ask hopefully.'
+			'They glance among each other before Lazar replies. "Maybe some other time <<$pcs_nickname>>..." They turn away from you and start picking teams.'
 			act 'Sit and watch them':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 30
 				grupvalue[2] += 1
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/watching.jpg"></center>'
-				'You take a seat on the ground near the field and watch the jocks play football. Most of them are pretty competitive really pushing it to try and win. Occasionally there is some arguments about a foul, but for the most part they get along and have fun. You have to admit it looks pretty fun, maybe you could ask to join them again one day.'
+				'You take a seat on the ground near the field and watch them play. Most of them are pretty competitive and are really pushing it to try and win. There are some occasional arguments about a foul, but for the most part they get along and have fun. You have to admit it looks pretty fun, and think that you should ask to join them again one day.'
 				act 'Leave': gt 'gschool_grounds', 'main' 
 			end
 			act 'Leave': gt 'gschool_grounds', 'main' 
 		end
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/pickteam.jpg"></center>'
-		'Walking through the school area, ending up by the football field you notice that most of the ''jocks'' have gathered. Noticing you they wave you over.'
+		'Walking through the school area, you end up by the football field and notice that most of the jocks have gathered here. Noticing you, they wave you over.'
 		'"Over here <<$pcs_nickname>>! You arrived just in time, we were just picking teams." Lazar explains.'
-		'You quickly move over to the other girls while Lazar and Ivan continue on discussing on how to split up the teams.'
-		'"I say we go for mixed teams, there''s no other way it will work Ivan!" Lazar is trying his best to reason with Ivan.'
+		'You quickly move over to the other girls while Lazar and Ivan continue discussing how to split up the teams.'
+		'"I say we go for mixed teams. There''s no other way it will work Ivan!" Lazar is trying his best to reason with Ivan.'
 		if fedorKozlovQW >= 0:
-			'"Sure sure..." Ivan waves his hands, "Let''s start already! I pick Fedor first!" as he points to Fedor to come over.'
+			'"Sure, sure..." Ivan says as he raises his hands. "Let''s start already! I pick Fedor first!" and points to his friend.'
 		else
-			'"Sure sure..." Ivan waves his hands, "Let''s start already! I pick Erast first!" as he points to Erast to come over.'
+			'"Sure, sure..." Ivan says as he raises his hands. "Let''s start already! I pick Erast first!" and points to Erast.'
 		end
 		
 		act 'Leave': gt 'gschool_grounds', 'main'
@@ -64,14 +64,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/pickteam.jpg"></center>'
-	'Walking through the school area, ending up by the football field you notice that most of the ''jocks'' have gathered. Noticing you they wave you over.'
+	'Walking through the school area, you end up by the football field and notice that most of the jocks have gathered here. Noticing you, they wave you over.'
 	'"Over here <<$pcs_nickname>>! You arrived just in time, we were just picking teams." Lazar explains.'
-	'You quickly move over to the other girls while Lazar and Ivan continue on discussing on how to split up the teams.'
-	'"I say we go for mixed teams, there''s no other way it will work Ivan!" Lazar is trying his best to reason with Ivan.'
+	'You quickly move over to the other girls while Lazar and Ivan continue discussing how to split up the teams.'
+	'"I say we go for mixed teams. There''s no other way it will work Ivan!" Lazar is trying his best to reason with Ivan.'
 	if fedorKozlovQW >= 0:
-		'"Sure sure..." Ivan waves his hands, "Let''s start already! I pick Fedor first!" as he points to Fedor to come over.'
+		'"Sure, sure..." Ivan says as he raises his hands. "Let''s start already! I pick Fedor first!" and points to his friend.'
 	else
-		'"Sure sure..." Ivan waves his hands, "Let''s start already! I pick Erast first!" as he points to Erast to come over.'
+		'"Sure, sure..." Ivan says as he raises his hands. "Let''s start already! I pick Erast first!" and points to Erast.'
 	end
 
 	act 'Wait to get picked':
@@ -79,31 +79,31 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 		minut += 10
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/pickteam.jpg"></center>'
-		'After a few picks you finally hear your name being yelled out, "<<$pcs_nickname>>! You''ll be playing with the winning team today." Lazar confidently proclaims.'
+		'After a few of the others have been chosen, you finally hear your name being yelled out. "<<$pcs_nickname>>! You''ll be playing with the winning team today." Lazar confidently proclaims.'
 		'You quickly scuttle over to your team as they all high five you.'
-		'It doesn''t take long before all of the participants have been picked and the teams huddle together, "Vanya you''ll be in the goal..." Lazar begins calling out the different positions.'
-		'Saving you for last Lazar looks at you, "<<$pcs_nickname>> you''ll be playing up front as our star forward." he winks, "Don''t worry about anything just be ready when the ball comes."'
+		'It doesn''t take long before all of the participants have been picked and the teams huddle together. "Vanya, you''ll be in the goal..." Lazar begins calling out the different positions.'
+		'Saving you for last, Lazar looks at you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, you''ll be playing up front as our star forward." he winks. "Don''t worry about anything. Just be ready when the ball comes."'
 		
 		act 'Nod':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/start.jpg"></center>'
-			'You attentively nod as you break the huddle as position yourself on the field.'
-			'"You''re playing with a girl as forward! You must''ve lost it, Lazar!" Ivan is yelling loudly.'
-			'"Pay no attention to him <<$pcs_nickname>>, he''s just trying to get in your head." Lazar calmly tells you, "They have a girl in the goal so don''t worry about it."'
+			'You attentively nod as you break the huddle and position yourself on the field.'
+			'"Playing with a girl as forward? You must''ve lost it, Lazar!" Ivan yells loudly.'
+			'"Pay no attention to him <<$pcs_nickname>>, he''s just trying to get in your head." Lazar calmly tells you. "They have a girl in the goal, so don''t worry about it."'
 			
 			act 'Start the first half':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 30
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/game.jpg"></center>'
-				'You didn''t expect the game to be this serious but as soon as you started playing, everyone is doing their best, not backing down an inch.'
-				'The game is going back and forth with many chances created by both sides. The boys are really going at it, sometimes playing on the edge of being a bit too rough.'
-				'After about 15 minutes Lazar sets up a perfect pass to Svyatoslav that runs through the defense and easily scores the first goal behind a helpless Lariska. All of you run over to cheer together while Ivan is criticizing his team.'
-				'The joyous occasion breaks a few minutes later when Christina equalizes the game. After the goal Ivan comes over and starts making fun of Vanya as the latter pushes him and they get in a scuffle.'
-				'"Break it up, you two! Head over to your sides so everyone can calm down!" Lazar barks as he''s running over to break the two combatants up. The game resumes as everyone have calmed down a bit.' 
-				'All of a sudden Lina breaks free and is heading against your goal, "<<$pcs_nickname>> stop her!" you hear someone from your team yell.'
+				'You didn''t expect the game to be this serious. As soon as you start playing, everyone is doing their best, not backing down an inch.'
+				'The boys really get into at it, sometimes playing on the edge of being a bit too rough.'
+				'Lazar sets up a perfect pass to Svyatoslav, who runs through the defense and easily scores the first goal behind a helpless Lariska. All of you run over to cheer together while Ivan is criticizing his team.'
+				'The joyous occasion breaks a few minutes later when Christina equalizes the game. After the goal, Ivan comes over and starts making fun of Vanya as the latter pushes him and they get in a scuffle.'
+				'"Break it up, you two! Head over to your sides so everyone can calm down!" Lazar barks as he''s running over to break the two combatants up. The game resumes after everyone has calmed down a bit.' 
+				'All of a sudden, Lina breaks free and is heading against your goal. "Stop her <<$pcs_nickname>>!" you hear someone from your team yell.'
 				
 				act 'Tackle':
 					*clr & cla
@@ -115,31 +115,31 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 					npc_rel['A19'] -= 1
 					gs 'stat'	
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/tackle.jpg"></center>'					
-					'You nod steadfast and quickly start running after Lina. You are almost galloping as you near her as you can almost grab hold of her...'
-					'Lina is nervously turning around while trying to compose herself as she leads the ball towards the goal. By now you''re right next to her so you can hear her heavy breath...'
-					'Knowing she won''t be able to stay away from you much longer Lina pushes the ball a bit forward so she can shoot the ball towards the goal, "Stop her now!" you hear someone yell from behind. Just as Lina is about to shoot you do a slide tackle, missing the ball and hitting Lina on the leg instead.'
-					'Lina yells out in pain and falls to the grass. You''ve managed to stop her and your team is praising you while you see Christina run over to you, "What the fuck are you doing <<$pcs_nickname>>?! Are you stupid?" She pushes you and you two start to argue.'
-					'"Okay, that''s enough for now!" Svyatoslav has to calm down everyone once again. Both Christina and you are dragged away while Svyatoslav sees after Lina.'
+					'You nod steadfast and quickly start running after Lina. You are almost galloping as you catch up and can almost grab hold of her...'
+					'Lina nervously turns around while trying to compose herself as she leads the ball towards the goal. By now you''re right next to her, so you can hear her heavy breathing.'
+					'Knowing she won''t be able to stay away from you much longer, Lina pushes the ball a bit forward so she can shoot the ball towards the goal. "Stop her now!" you hear someone yell from behind. Just as Lina is about to shoot you do a slide tackle, but miss the ball and hit her on the leg instead.'
+					'Lina yells out in pain and falls to the ground. You''ve managed to stop her and your team is praising you as you see Christina run over to you. "What the fuck are you doing <<$pcs_nickname>>?! Are you stupid?" She pushes you and you start to argue.'
+					'"Okay, that''s enough for now!" Svyatoslav barks, calming everyone down once again. You and Christina are pulled away from each other while Svyatoslav helps Lina.'
 				
 					act 'Time for a break':
 						*clr & cla
 						minut += 10
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/halftime.jpg"></center>'
-						'Both of the teams take a seat on each side, just enough from each others hearing distance, "You ready <<$pcs_nickname>>?" A sweaty Lazar asks you.'
-						'You hesitate a little, "Ready for what?"'
-						'"To decide the game of course." he says smiling, "They won''t expect that I''ll pass it over to you so be ready when the time comes and decide the game for us!"'
-						'You notice the fire burning in his eyes and you give him a confident nod.'
+						'Both teams take a seat, just outside of each other''s hearing distance. "You ready <<$pcs_nickname>>?" a sweaty Lazar asks.'
+						'You hesitate a little. "Ready for what?"'
+						'"To decide the game of course." he says smiling. "They won''t expect that I''ll pass to you, so be ready when the time comes and decide the game for us!"'
+						'You notice the fire burning in his eyes and give him a confident nod.'
 				
 						act 'Start the second half':
 							*clr & cla
 							minut += 25
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/game1.jpg"></center>'
-							'The second half starts in a frantic pace as both the teams try to outscore each other. There are chances for both the teams but the score still remains tied...'
-							'All of a sudden Lazar manages to dribble past through Ivan and sends the ball towards you.'
-							'The pass is really hard but somehow you manage to get control of the ball and suddenly all that is between you and the goal is Christina rushing towards you...'
-							'Seeing Svyatoslav make a dash towards the goal you can pass. You can also dribble past Christina and be the hero or try to shoot and hope for the best. You need to quickly decide as Christina is closing in...'
+							'The second half starts in a frantic pace as both teams try to outscore each other. There are chances for both teams, but the score still remains tied...'
+							'All of a sudden, Lazar manages to get past Ivan and sends the ball towards you.'
+							'The pass is really hard, but you somehow manage to get control of the ball and all that''s between you and the goal is Christina, who is rapidly bearing down on you.'
+							'Seeing Svyatoslav make a dash towards the goal, you have a choice. You can try and get past Christina and make a shot at the goal, or you can pass the ball to Svyatoslav. You need to decide quickly as Christina is closing in on you.'
 							
 							gs 'willpower', 'skill', 'self', 'ftbll_lvl'
 							if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -148,7 +148,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 									gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 									ftbll_exp += rand(0,2)
 									gs 'stat'
-									'You feel pressured to act. You must decide otherwise the attack will go to waste...'
+									'You feel pressured to act. You must decide, otherwise the attack will go to waste...'
 									
 									act 'Pass':
 										*clr & cla
@@ -165,10 +165,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/pass.jpg"></center>'
 											'You decide to pass the ball to Svyatoslav. You can clearly see him waving his hands, yelling that he''s free.'
-											'You size up the distance and hit the ball towards him. The ball floats through the air and lands perfectly at his feet. Not making a mistake Svyatoslav just taps it in and you take the lead.'
-											'You all start celebrating like crazy and before you know it the second half ends.'
-											'"Great pass <<$pcs_nickname>>! I knew you could do it!" Lazar praises you, "Can''t wait until next time where you get to show off your skills again!"'
-											'You stand and chat for a moment after the game with everyone complementing you for a job well done.'
+											'You size up the distance and hit the ball towards him. The ball floats through the air and lands perfectly at his feet. He just taps it in and you take the lead, firing the ball into the net.'
+											'You all start celebrating and before you know it, the second half ends.'
+											'"Great pass <<$pcs_nickname>>! I knew you could do it!" Lazar praises you. "Can''t wait until next time when you can show off your skills again!"'
+											'You stand and chat for a minute after the game, with everyone complimenting you for a job well done.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										else
@@ -178,10 +178,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/passfail.jpg"></center>'
 											'You decide to pass the ball to Svyatoslav. You can clearly see him waving his hands, yelling that he''s free.'
-											'You size up the distance and hit the ball towards him. But you''ve misjudged the distance and the ball goes well off.'
-											'You see Svyatoslav shake his head disappointingly and not far after that the game ends in a draw...'
-											'"Too bad about the pass <<$pcs_nickname>>, we could''ve won..." Svyatoslav comments...'
-											'"Give her a break Svyatoslav... she''ll do better the next time, won''t you <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lazar is probably really disappointed but tries his best to remain positive.'
+											'You size up the distance and hit the ball towards him. However, you misjudge the distance and the ball goes well off.'
+											'You see Svyatoslav shake his head disappointingly and not long after that, the game ends in a draw.'
+											'"Too bad about the pass <<$pcs_nickname>>, we could''ve won..." Svyatoslav comments.'
+											'"Give her a break Svyatoslav! She''ll do better the next time, won''t you <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lazar is obviously disappointed, but tries his best to remain positive.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										end
@@ -199,10 +199,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											grupvalue[2] += 1
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/shoot.jpg"></center>'
-											'You take aim at the further corner and kick the ball. The ball gets the perfect arch and sails above Lina that has no way to stop it.'
-											'You manage to raise your hands just in time before the rest of your team runs over to you, burying you furthest down in a pile as you all celebrate.'
-											'Not long after the goal the game ends, "See <<$pcs_nickname>>! I told you that you would decide the game!" Lazar praises you.'
-											'You shine up, "Thank you! It wouldn''t have been possible without you..." you praise Lazar back. The two of you and the rest of the team chat for a while before you pick up your stuff and leave.'
+											'You take aim and kick the ball. It gets the perfect arch and sails above Lariska''s head into the net.'
+											'You manage to raise your hands just in time before your team runs over to you, burying you furthest down in a pile as you all celebrate.'
+											'Not long after the goal, the game ends. "See <<$pcs_nickname>>! I told you that you would decide the game!" Lazar praises you.'
+											'You shine up. "Thank you! It wouldn''t have been possible without you..." you praise Lazar back. You all chat for a while before you pick up your stuff and leave.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										else
@@ -211,10 +211,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											vital_exp += 1
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/shootfail.jpg"></center>'
-											'You take aim at the further corner and kick the ball. The ball wobbles over the goal as you''ve not put enough pressure on it.'
+											'You take aim and kick the ball. However, it wobbles over the goal as you''ve not put enough force into your shot.'
 											'You stand and look into the distance, disappointed that you let down the rest of the team.'
-											'Not long after that the game ends and the two teams walk over the sidelines, "Too bad that you missed that shot <<$pcs_nickname>>... Don''t worry though, you''ll get it the next time." Lazar is trying to cheer you up.'
-											'You nod but you''re not really in the mood to chat so you quickly pick up your stuff and leave as soon as possible.'
+											'Not long after that, the game ends and the two teams walk over the sidelines. "Too bad that you missed that shot <<$pcs_nickname>>... Don''t worry though, you''ll get it next time." Lazar says, trying to cheer you up.'
+											'You nod, but you''re not really in the mood to chat so you quickly pick up your stuff and leave.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										end
@@ -235,11 +235,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											grupvalue[2] += 1
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/dribble.jpg"></center>'
-											'With Christina closing in you take a step to the right making her follow you. As soon as she catches up to you, you change it up quickly turning to the left and dribble past her...'
-											'You''ve completely fooled her and you can hear the others gasp in awe as you''re free against the goalkeeper. You make short work of it and smash the ball into the net, giving your team the lead.'
-											'It doesn''t take long after that the game ends and you are victorious. Everyone is talking about the amazing dribbling move you pulled off, while Christina, fuming, quickly collects her stuff and leaves.'
+											'With Christina closing in you take a step to the right, making her follow you. As soon as she catches up, you quickly jump to the left and dribble past her.'
+											'You''ve completely fooled her and you can hear the others gasp in awe as you''re free to take your shot at the goal. You make short work of it and smash the ball into the net, giving your team the lead.'
+											'The game ends soon after and you are victorious. Everyone is talking about the amazing move you pulled off while Christina, fuming, quickly collects her stuff and leaves.'
 											'"Great job <<$pcs_nickname>>! I knew you could do it!" Lazar praises you.'
-											'"Thanks a lot I had lots of fun!" you reply. You and your teammates stand and chat for a while before you all pack your stuff and leave the field.'
+											'"Thanks a lot I had lots of fun!" you reply. You and your teammates stand and chat for a while before you all pack up your stuff and leave the field.'
 										
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										else
@@ -248,11 +248,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											vital_exp += 1
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/dribblefail.jpg"></center>'
-											'With Christina closing in you take a step to the right making her follow you. As soon as she catches up to you, you change it up quickly turning to the left and dribble past her...'
-											'But Christina has already read what you''re up to and she quickly tackles you making you lose the ball as you get tangled up...'
-											'She smirks as she passes by, "You really thought you could fool me with that silly move?"'
-											'Not long after that situation the game ends in a draw. As you approach the rest of your team you say, "I''m really sorry. I thought I could dribble pass her."'
-											'The others nod acting as they understand but deep down they''re disappointed that you couldn''t win the game. Not wanting to make further noise, you pick up your stuff in silence, say your goodbye''s and leave.'
+											'With Christina closing in you take a step to the right, making her follow you. As soon as she catches up, you quickly jump to the left and dribble past her.'
+											'However, Christina, already aware of your plan, quickly tackles you and takes the ball as you get tangled up.'
+											'She smirks as she passes you. "You really thought you could fool me with that silly move?"'
+											'Not long after that, the game ends in a draw. As you approach the rest of your team you say "Sorry guys, I thought I could get past her."'
+											'The others nod, acting as if they understand, but deep down they''re disappointed that you couldn''t win the game. Not wanting to say anything else, you pick up your stuff in silence, say your goodbyes and leave.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										end
@@ -274,10 +274,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 								grupvalue[2] -= 1
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/fail.jpg"></center>'
-								'There are too many options and you hesitate, not sure on what to do. It only takes a second and you''re swarmed by the other team and they easily steal the ball from you and go on the counter.'
-								'Two passes later, you can hear the ball hit the net and you see the other team celebrating like crazy, "Thank you for freezing <<$pcs_nickname>>! I dedicate this win to you!" Ivan teases you.'
-								'The game ends shortly after their goal and at the end your team looks dejected while you''re feeling really bad for messing up...'
-								'The others ignore you for the rest of the time and as you''re about to leave Lazar approaches you, "Don''t take it too hard, we''re all disappointed but we''ll get our revenge next time."'
+								'There are too many options and you hesitate, not sure what to do. In a matter of seconds, you''re swarmed by the other team. They easily steal the ball from you and go on the offensive.'
+								'Two passes later, you can hear the ball hit the net and you see the other team celebrating. "Thanks <<$pcs_nickname>>! I dedicate this win to you!" Ivan says teasingly.'
+								'The game ends shortly after and your team looks dejected as you feel ashamed at messing up.'
+								'The others ignore you when you go back to the sidelines, but as you''re about to leave Lazar approaches you. "Don''t take it too hard <<$pcs_nickname>>. We''re all disappointed, but we''ll get our revenge next time."'
 								
 								act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 							end
@@ -290,19 +290,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 					minut += 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/notackle.jpg"></center>'
-					'You hesitate a little as you hear someone yell out, "Run after her <<$pcs_nickname>>! You''re the only one that can stop her now..."'
-					'Running as fast as you can, you start catching up to her. You can almost reach out to her but you''re still unsure on how to stop her...'
-					'All of sudden you hear someone yell from behind, "Stop her! She''s winding up a shot!"'
+					'You hesitate a little as you hear someone yell out "Run after her <<$pcs_nickname>>! You''re the only one who can stop her!"'
+					'Running as fast as you can, you start catching up to her. You can almost reach out to her, but you''re still unsure on how to stop her.'
+					'All of a sudden, you hear someone yell from behind. "Stop her! She''s winding up a shot!"'
 				
 					if rand(0,1) = 1:
-						'You finally decide about what to do, you use the last of your strength to run up to her and give her a slight bump on the shoulder just as she''s about to take a shot.'
-						'Lina manages to take a shot and to your luck it manages to go way off, the little bump you gave her was just what was needed.'
-						'You hear Lina yell out in frustration as your teammates are encouraging you for a job well done.'
+						'You finally decide what to do, Using the last of your strength, you run up to her and give her a slight bump on the shoulder just as she''s about to take the shot.'
+						'Lina manages to take a shot, but your interference means that it''s way off and misses.'
+						'You hear Lina yell out in frustration as your teammates congradulate you for a job well done.'
 					else
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/notackle.jpg"></center>'
-						'You finally decide about what to do, you use the last of your strength to run up to her and give her a slight bump on the shoulder just as she''s about to take a shot.'
-						'But to no avail, Lina just barely even feels the impact and hits the ball straight into the goal.'
-						'She runs away happy to her team while your team is looking disappointingly at you...'
+						'You finally decide about to do. Using the last of your strength, you run up to her and give her a slight bump on the shoulder just as she''s about to take the shot.'
+						'However, Lina barely even feels the impact and hits the ball straight into the goal. She runs away happy to her team while your team looks on at you disappointed.'
 					end
 					
 					act 'Time for a break':
@@ -310,20 +309,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 						minut += 10
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/halftime.jpg"></center>'
-						'Both of the teams take a seat on each side, just enough from each others hearing distance, "You ready <<$pcs_nickname>>?" A sweaty Lazar asks you.'
-						'You hesitate a little, "Ready for what?"'
-						'"To decide the game of course." he says smiling, "They won''t expect that I''ll pass it over to you so be ready when the time comes and decide the game for us!"'
-						'You notice the fire burning in his eyes and you give him a confident nod.'
+						'Both teams take a seat on each side, just outside each other''s hearing distance. "You ready <<$pcs_nickname>>?" a sweaty Lazar asks you.'
+						'You hesitate a little. "Ready for what?"'
+						'"To decide the game of course." he says smiling. "They won''t expect that I''ll pass it over to you, so be ready when the time comes and decide the game for us!"'
+						'You notice the fire burning in his eyes and give him a confident nod.'
 				
 						act 'Start the second half':
 							*clr & cla
 							minut += 25
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/game1.jpg"></center>'
-							'The second half starts in a frantic pace as both the teams try to outscore each other. There are chances for both the teams but the score still remains tied...'
-							'All of a sudden Lazar manages to dribble past through Ivan and sends the ball towards you.'
-							'The pass is really hard but somehow you manage to get control of the ball and suddenly all that is between you and the goal is Christina rushing towards you...'
-							'Seeing Svyatoslav make a dash towards the goal you can pass. You can also dribble past Christina and be the hero or try to shoot and hope for the best. You need to quickly decide as Christina is closing in...'
+							'The second half starts in a frantic pace as both teams try to outscore each other. There are chances for both teams, but the score still remains tied.'
+							'All of a sudden, Lazar manages to get past Ivan and sends the ball towards you.'
+							'The pass is really hard, but you somehow manage to get control of the ball and all that''s between you and the goal is Christina, who is rapidly bearing down on you.'
+							'Seeing Svyatoslav make a dash towards the goal, you have a choice. You can try and get past Christina and make a shot at the goal, or you can pass the ball to Svyatoslav. You need to decide quickly as Christina is closing in on you.'
 							
 							gs 'willpower', 'skill', 'self', 'ftbll_lvl'
 							if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -332,7 +331,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 									gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 									ftbll_exp += rand(0,2)
 									gs 'stat'
-									'You feel pressured to act. You must decide otherwise the attack will go to waste...'
+									'You feel pressured to act. You must decide, otherwise the attack will go to waste...'
 									
 									act 'Pass':
 										*clr & cla
@@ -348,10 +347,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/pass.jpg"></center>'
 											'You decide to pass the ball to Svyatoslav. You can clearly see him waving his hands, yelling that he''s free.'
-											'You size up the distance and hit the ball towards him. The ball floats through the air and lands perfectly at his feet. Not making a mistake Svyatoslav just taps it in and you take the lead.'
-											'You all start celebrating like crazy and before you know it the second half ends.'
-											'"Great pass <<$pcs_nickname>>! I knew you could do it!" Lazar praises you, "Can''t wait until next time where you get to show off your skills again!"'
-											'You stand and chat for a moment after the game with everyone complementing you for a job well done.'
+											'You size up the distance and hit the ball towards him. The ball floats through the air and lands perfectly at his feet. He just taps it in and you take the lead. firing the ball into the net.'
+											'You all start celebrating and before you know it, the second half ends.'
+											'"Great pass <<$pcs_nickname>>! I knew you could do it!" Lazar praises you. "Can''t wait until next time when you can show off your skills again!"'
+											'You stand and chat for a minute after the game, with everyone complimenting you for a job well done.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										else
@@ -361,10 +360,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											gs 'stat'		
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/passfail.jpg"></center>'											
 											'You decide to pass the ball to Svyatoslav. You can clearly see him waving his hands, yelling that he''s free.'
-											'You size up the distance and hit the ball towards him. But you''ve misjudged the distance and the ball goes well off.'
-											'You see Svyatoslav shake his head disappointingly and not far after that the game ends in a draw...'
-											'"Too bad about the pass <<$pcs_nickname>>, we could''ve won..." Svyatoslav comments...'
-											'"Give her a break Svyatoslav... she''ll do better the next time, won''t you <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lazar is probably really disappointed but tries his best to remain positive.'
+											'You size up the distance and hit the ball towards him, but you misjudge the distance and the ball goes well off.'
+											'You see Svyatoslav shake his head disappointingly and not long after, the game ends in a draw.'
+											'"Too bad about the pass <<$pcs_nickname>>, we could''ve won." Svyatoslav comments.'
+											'"Give her a break Svyatoslav! She''ll do better the next time, won''t you <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Lazar is obviously disappointed, but tries his best to remain positive.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										end
@@ -383,10 +382,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											grupvalue[2] += 1
 											gs 'stat'		
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/shoot.jpg"></center>'
-											'You take aim at the further corner and kick the ball. The ball gets the perfect arch and sails above Lina that has no way to stop it.'
-											'You manage to raise your hands just in time before the rest of your team runs over to you, burying you furthest down in a pile as you all celebrate.'
-											'Not long after the goal the game ends, "See <<$pcs_nickname>>! I told you that you would decide the game!" Lazar praises you.'
-											'You shine up, "Thank you! It wouldn''t have been possible without you..." you praise Lazar back. The two of you and the rest of the team chat for a while before you pick up your stuff and leave.'
+											'You take aim and kick the ball. It gets the perfect arch and sails above Lariska''s head into the net.'
+											'You manage to raise your hands just in time before your team runs over to you, burying you furthest down in a pile as you all celebrate.'
+											'Not long after, the game ends. "See <<$pcs_nickname>>! I told you that you would decide the game!" Lazar praises you.'
+											'You shine up. "Thank you! It wouldn''t have been possible without you..." you praise Lazar back. You all chat for a while before you pack up your stuff and leave.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										else
@@ -395,10 +394,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											vital_exp += 1
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/shootfail.jpg"></center>'
-											'You take aim at the further corner and kick the ball. The ball wobbles over the goal as you''ve not put enough pressure on it.'
+											'You take aim and kick the ball. However, it wobbles over the goal as you''ve not put enough force into the shot.'
 											'You stand and look into the distance, disappointed that you let down the rest of the team.'
-											'Not long after that the game ends and the two teams walk over the sidelines, "Too bad that you missed that shot <<$pcs_nickname>>... Don''t worry though, you''ll get it the next time." Lazar is trying to cheer you up.'
-											'You nod but you''re not really in the mood to chat so you quickly pick up your stuff and leave as soon as possible.'
+											'Not long after, the game ends and the two teams walk over the sidelines. "Too bad that you missed that shot <<$pcs_nickname>>... Don''t worry though, you''ll get it the next time." Lazar says, trying to cheer you up.'
+											'You nod, but you''re not really in the mood to chat, so you quickly pick up your stuff and leave.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										end
@@ -419,11 +418,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											grupvalue[2] += 1
 											gs 'stat'		
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/dribble.jpg"></center>'
-											'With Christina closing in you take a step to the right making her follow you. As soon as she catches up to you, you change it up quickly turning to the left and dribble past her...'
-											'You''ve completely fooled her and you can hear the others gasp in awe as you''re free against the goalkeeper. You make short of it and smash the ball into the net, giving your team the lead.'
-											'It doesn''t take long after that the game ends and you are victorious. Everyone is talking about the amazing dribbling move you pulled off while Christina, fuming, quickly collects her stuff and leaves.'
+											'With Christina closing in you take a step to the right, making her follow you. As soon as she catches up, you quickly jump to the left and dribble past her...'
+											'You''ve completely fooled her and you can hear the others gasp in awe as you''re free to take your shot at the goal. You make short of it and smash the ball into the net, giving your team the lead.'
+											'It doesn''t take long after that the game ends and you are victorious. Everyone is talking about the amazing move you pulled off while Christina, fuming, quickly collects her stuff and leaves.'
 											'"Great job <<$pcs_nickname>>! I knew you could do it!" Lazar praises you.'
-											'"Thanks a lot I had lots of fun!" you reply. You and your teammates stand and chat for a while before you all pack your stuff and leave the field.'
+											'"Thanks a lot, I had lots of fun!" you reply. You and your teammates stand and chat for a while before you all pack up your stuff and leave the field.'
 										
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										else
@@ -432,11 +431,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 											vital_exp += 1
 											gs 'stat'	
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/dribblefail.jpg"></center>'
-											'With Christina closing in you take a step to the right making her follow you. As soon as she catches up to you, you change it up quickly turning to the left and dribble past her...'
-											'But Christina has already read what you''re up to and she quickly tackles you making you lose the ball as you get tangled up...'
-											'She smirks as she passes by, "You really thought you could fool me with that silly move?"'
-											'Not long after that situation the game ends in a draw. As you approach the rest of your team you say, "I''m really sorry. I thought I could dribble pass her."'
-											'The others nod acting as they understand but deep down they''re disappointed that you couldn''t win the game. Not wanting to make further noise, you pick up your stuff in silence, say your goodbye''s and leave.'
+											'With Christina closing in you take a step to the right, making her follow you. As soon as she catches up, you quickly jump to the left and dribble past her...'
+											'However, Christina, already aware of your plan, quickly tackles you and takes the ball as you get tangled up.'
+											'She smirks as she passes. "You really thought you could fool me with that silly move?"'
+											'Not long after, the game ends in a draw. As you approach the rest of your team you say "Sorry guys, I thought I could get pass her."'
+											'The others nod, acting as if they understand, but deep down they''re disappointed that you couldn''t win the game. Not wanting to say anything else, you pick up your stuff in silence, say your goodbyes and leave.'
 											
 											act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 										end
@@ -458,10 +457,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'football':
 								grupvalue[2] -= 1
 								gs 'stat'	
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/fail.jpg"></center>'
-								'There are too many options and you hesitate, not sure on what to do. It only takes a second and you''re swarmed by the other team and they easily disarm you and go on the counter.'
-								'Two passes later, you can hear the ball hit the net and you see the other team celebrating like crazy, "Thank you for freezing <<$pcs_nickname>>! I dedicate this win to you!" Ivan teases you.'
-								'The game ends shortly after their goal and at the end your team looks dejected while you''re feeling really bad for messing up...'
-								'The others ignore you for the rest of the time and as you''re about to leave Lazar approaches you, "Don''t take it too hard, we''re all disappointed but we''ll get our revenge next time."'
+								'There are too many options and you hesitate, not sure what to do. In a matter of seconds, you''re swarmed by the other team. They easily steal the ball and go on the offensive.'
+								'Two passes later, you can hear the ball hit the net and you see the other team celebrating. "Thanks <<$pcs_nickname>>! I dedicate this win to you!" Ivan says teasingly.'
+								'The game ends shortly after and your team looks dejected as you feel ashamed at messing up.'
+								'The others ignore you when you return to the sidelines, but as you''re about to leave Lazar approaches you. "Don''t take it too hard <<$pcs_nickname>>. We''re all disappointed, but we''ll get our revenge next time."'
 								act 'End the game': gt 'fbgameout', 'end_game'
 							end
 						end
@@ -477,7 +476,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'end_game':
 	minut += 20
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/pickupgames/football/aftergame.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once the game is over, you are all tired and sweaty, but everyone had a great time. You all go over to the bleachers and find a seat to rest. You talk and joke with one another about the game, the winners bragging on their win, while the losers promise revenge next time.Once rested everyone starts to get up and drift away to go do other things, saying their goodbyes.'
+	'Once the game is over, you''re all tired and sweaty, but everyone had a great time. You all go over to the bleachers and find a seat to rest. You talk and joke with one another about the game, the winners bragging while the losers promise revenge. Once rested, everyone starts getting up and saying their goodbyes before going their seperate ways.'
 	act 'Leave': gt 'gschool_grounds', 'main'
 end
 

locations/gschool_grounds.qsrc

@@ -19,7 +19,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/building/gschool.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 	'Pavlovsk''s only school, where all the local children go for their education. Next to the school is the athletic field and a parking lot for the teachers, with a large grove of trees just beyond them.' 
-	'Past this grove is the old school building, which was supposed to be renovated and used for advance classes after the new one was built, but budget cuts meant the project was cancelled and now the old school building stands empty. Many of the kids use it to skip class or as a place to sneak off to drink or have sex.'
+	'Hidden behind these trees is the old school building, which was supposed to be renovated and used for advance classes after the new one was built, but budget cuts meant the project was cancelled and now the old building stands empty and abandoned. It''s a popular spot for students to skip class or hang out outside of school.'
 
 	if ((hour = 6 and minut >= 30) or (hour >= 7 and hour < 18)) and StoryLine > 0 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and kanikuli = 0:
 		'With the school open you can go to the <a href="exec: minut += 1 & gt ''gschool_grounds'', ''change_room''">changing rooms</a> by the gym and change your outfit.'
@@ -27,13 +27,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 
 	if day = nyp_day and month = 12 and StoryLine = 1 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and SchoolBlock = 0:
 		if hour >= 14 and hour < 17:
-			'All the boys and girls are standing near the school. Everyone did their best to look good today, wearing their nicest clothes. Someone calls out to you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, are you coming to the New Year''s Eve party or not? You didn''t pay the 1000 <b>₽</b> entry fee yet!"'
+			'All of the boys and girls are standing near the school. Everyone did their best to look good today, wearing their nicest clothes. Someone calls out to you. "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, are you coming to the New Year''s Eve party or not? You haven''t paid the 1000 <b>₽</b> entry fee yet!"'
 
 			if money >= 1000:act 'Go to the party (1,000 <b>₽</b>)':money -= 1000 & gt 'nyp_school', 'start'
 		end
 	end
 	
-	if InvitationToDimkaNYparty = 1 and day = 31 and day = nyp_day: act 'Follow Dimka to the New Year''s party at his home': killvar 'InvitationToDimkaNYparty' & minut += 30 & gt 'sny', '3'
+	if InvitationToDimkaNYparty = 1 and day = 31 and day = nyp_day: act 'Follow Dimka to the party at his house': killvar 'InvitationToDimkaNYparty' & minut += 30 & gt 'sny', '3'
 
 	if hour = 14 and week < 6 and kanikuli = 0:
 		gs 'gschool_socialchg', 'group_student_rel_change'
@@ -110,8 +110,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 				gs 'underwear', 'remove'
 				gs 'clothing', 'strip'
 				gs 'stat'
-				'After the official graduation, everyone gets hammered at the prom party. You don''t remember much of what happened, only recalling a few flashbacks of going skinny dipping in the town fountain with a group of friends. Your mouth is dry and you can taste beer and what might be a kebab. Looking around, you see that you are somewhere in the town center, all of your clothes are missing and you are completely naked.'
-				'As you make your way back home, you try to be discrete and stick to poorly lit areas, but you really don''t remember and somehow have bits of someone''s hedge in your hair.'
+				'After the ceremony, everyone gets hammered at the prom party. When you wake up, your mouth is dry and you can taste and smell the alcohol on your breath as you feel a headache coming on. Looking around, you see that you''re somewhere in the town center and that you''re completely naked, with twigs and leaves stuck in your hair. You are a little alarmed when you notice that your clothes are missing.'
+				'You''re unable to find your clothes, so you cover yourself with your hands and stick to poorly lit areas as you make your way home. You try as hard as you can, but all you can remember are vague flashbacks of skinny dipping in the town fountain with a group of other students.'
 
 				act 'Go home': gt 'korrPar'
 			end
@@ -167,17 +167,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 						menu_off = 1
 						'<center><b><font color="maroon">School Hallway</font></b></center>'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/building/gschool_hall0<<rand(0,2)>>.jpg"></center>'
-						'You don''t feel like attending all of your classes this morning. Surely no one will miss you if you skip one of your three morning classes.'
+						'You don''t feel like attending all of your classes this morning and so make your way to the bathroom.'
 						act 'Go to girl''s bathroom': gt 'gschool_girls_bathroom', 'start'
 						act 'Go to boy''s bathroom': gt 'gschool_boys_bathroom', 'start'
 					end
 				end
 			elseif hour = 8:
 				if NikoEv = 10: gt 'NikoWhore', 'Walk Of Shame'
-				'You missed your whole first class. You hope that no one noticed.'
+				'You missed your first class. You hope that no one noticed.'
 				act '<b>Rush to class</b>':	demerit += 10 & gt 'gschool_grounds', 'bulding'
 			elseif hour < 14:
-				'It''s too late for school now. You have been marked as absent today.'
+				'It''s too late for you to attend school now. You have been marked as absent today.'
 			end
 		else
 			'You''re not allowed to attend any classes at school if you''re not wearing your school uniform.'
@@ -239,32 +239,32 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 		if ivan_afterschool = 1: act 'Meet Ivan after school': gt 'gschool_sex', 'afterschool'
 
 		if Enable_tablemap = 0:
-			if anushkaFirstvisit = 0 and meet_after_school = 1: '<a href="exec: gt ''anushka'', ''meet_after_school''">Anushka Konstantinov</a> is leaning against a tree just in front of the school.'
-			if LariskaQW['story'] >= 5 and cheerleaders_on = 0: '<a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''LariskaGo''">Lariska Gruzdev</a> impatiently walks back and fourth across the courtyard, as if she''s waiting for someone.'
-			if JuliaMilLernQW >= 1: '<a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''JuliaMilGo''">Julia Milova</a> is sitting somewhere on the school courtyard, reading a book.'
-			if NatbelQW['QWstage'] > 0: '<a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''NatBelGo''">Natasha Belova</a> is standing in a corner.'
-			if artemLernQW >= 1 and artemVitokQW ! 2 and artemblok = 0 and artlie ! 2 and artembrokenheart ! 1: '<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''artem_events'', ''start''">Artem Chebotarev</a> is waiting for you near the school entrance.'
-			if npc_QW['A231'] = 1 or npc_QW['A231'] = 3 or npc_QW['A231'] >= 5: '<a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''AleksandraGo'', ''Start''"><<$npc_firstname[''A231'']>> <<$npc_lastname[''A231'']>></a> is waiting for you at the end of the school courtyard, listening to music.'
-
-			if katjaMeynoldday ! daystart and meynoldQW >= 1: '<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''katjaEv''">Katja Meynold</a> is walking across the school courtyard, getting ready to go home.'
+			if anushkaFirstvisit = 0 and meet_after_school = 1: '<a href="exec: gt ''anushka'', ''meet_after_school''">Anushka</a> is leaning against a tree just in front of the school.'
+			if LariskaQW['story'] >= 5 and cheerleaders_on = 0: '<a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''LariskaGo''">Lariska</a> impatiently walks back and fourth across the courtyard, as if she''s waiting for someone.'
+			if JuliaMilLernQW >= 1: '<a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''JuliaMilGo''">Julia</a> is sitting out on the courtyard, reading a book.'
+			if NatbelQW['QWstage'] > 0: '<a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''NatBelGo''">Natasha</a> is standing in a corner.'
+			if artemLernQW >= 1 and artemVitokQW ! 2 and artemblok = 0 and artlie ! 2 and artembrokenheart ! 1: '<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''artem_events'', ''start''">Artem</a> is waiting for you near the school entrance.'
+			if npc_QW['A231'] = 1 or npc_QW['A231'] = 3 or npc_QW['A231'] >= 5: '<a href="exec:minut += 1 & gt ''AleksandraGo'', ''Start''"><<$npc_firstname[''A231'']>></a> is waiting for you at the end of the school courtyard, listening to music.'
+
+			if katjaMeynoldday ! daystart and meynoldQW >= 1: '<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''katjaEv''">Katja</a> is walking across the school courtyard, getting ready to go home.'
 			if DimaBeHomeOnce = 1 and DimaRudeBlock = 0:
-				'<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''dimaEv'', ''after_school''">Dimka Nosov</a> is deep in thought, as he leans against a lamp post.'
+				'<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''dimaEv'', ''after_school''">Dimka</a> is deep in thought, as he leans against a lamp post.'
 			elseif DimaRudeQW > 0 and dimarudeday ! daystart and DimaRudeBlock = 0:
 				if rand(0,4) = 0: gt 'dimaEv', 'after_school'
-				'<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''dimaEv'', ''after_school''">Dimka Nosov</a> is deep in thought, as he leans against a lamp post.'
+				'<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''dimaEv'', ''after_school''">Dimka</a> is deep in thought, as he leans against a lamp post.'
 			end
-			if IgorLoverQW > 0 and igorkruglovday ! daystart and IdorBlock = 0: '<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''igorhome'', ''entrance''">Igor Kruglov</a> is talking to some of his friends on the courtyard.'
+			if IgorLoverQW > 0 and igorkruglovday ! daystart and IdorBlock = 0: '<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''igorhome'', ''entrance''">Igor</a> is talking to some of his friends on the courtyard.'
 			if fedorKozlovQW >= 10 and kotovVSkozlov = 1:
 				'You can see <a href="exec: gt ''FedorEv'', ''Strela Chat''">Fedor</a> sitting in the corner of the schoolyard by himself.'
 			elseif fedorKozlovQW >= 10 and fedorkozqw = 2 and FedorLuv < -4:
 				'You can see <a href="exec: gt ''FedorEv2'', ''Fedor Breakup''">Fedor</a> standing by himself with a troubled look on his face.'
 			elseif fedorKozlovQW >= 10:
-				'You can see <a href="exec: gt ''FedorEv'', ''Start''">Fedor</a> with his backpack around his arm, standing by himself.'
+				'You can see <a href="exec: gt ''FedorEv'', ''Start''">Fedor</a> standing by himself, his backpack around his arm.'
 			end
 			if NikoVolkovQW = 5 and NikoDate = 1 and NikoDate_Day ! daystart or NikoEv = 11:
 				'You can see <a href="exec:gt ''NikoEv'', ''Niko Dates''">Nikolai Volkov</a> smoking outside of the school.'
 			elseif NikoVolkovQW = 10 and NikoEv >= 17 and NikoEv <= 20 and NikoDate_Day ! daystart:
-				'<a href="exec:gt ''NikoEv2'', ''Events''">Nikolai Volkov</a> is smoking outside of the school.'	
+				'<a href="exec:gt ''NikoEv2'', ''Events''">Nikolai</a> is smoking outside of the school.'	
 			end
 		else
 			!display friends in table if switch is on.
@@ -301,13 +301,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 			end
 		end
 		if AlbinaQW['albride'] = 0 and AlbinaQW['RideDaystart'] <= daystart and AlbinaQW['Chernov'] > 0: 
-			'<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''albinaRide''">Albina Barlovskaya</a> is waiting behind the wheel of a large black SUV, parked near the school.'
+			'<a href="exec:minut += 15 & gt ''albinaRide''">Albina</a> is waiting behind the wheel of a large black SUV, parked near the school.'
 		end
 
 		! meynold`s events
 		if hour = 14 and vicky_afterschool ! daystart: gs 'mey_vika_events', 'near_school'
 		if mey_vika['mey_vika_qw'] = 35 or mey_vika['mey_vika_qw'] = 36 and minut < 45:
-			act 'Study with Tamara Mikhailovna':
+			act 'Study with Tamara':
 				if mey_vika['mey_vika_qw'] = 36: gt 'mey_tamara_events', 'rebuke'
 				gt 'mey_tamara_events', 'learning0'
 			end
@@ -316,9 +316,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'main':
 
 	if strelaDay ! daystart and strelaQW = 1 and hour = 14:
 		*clr & cla
-		'A Mitsubishi Pajero and a BMW drive up to the school gates. Strong, muscular guys in leather jackets and tracksuits get out of the cars. They have come to meet Vitek, Dan and Vasily. You watch them talk about something, though you''re not close enough to hear what it''s about. Then you notice Fedor Kozlov leaving school, his face all swollen and bruised. Fedor waves his hand at you, "<<$pcs_nickname>>! Come here, you''re my witness!"'
+		'A Mitsubishi Pajero and a BMW drive up to the school gates and strong, muscular guys in leather jackets and tracksuits get out of the cars. They have come to meet Vitek, Dan and Vasily. You watch them talk about something, although you''re not close enough to hear what it''s about. Then you notice Fedor leaving the school, his face swollen and bruised, and he waves at you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>! Come here, you''re my witness!"'
 
-		act 'Go and see what Fedor needs': gt 'strela'
+		act 'Go and see what he needs': gt 'strela'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -339,9 +339,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sports':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/fieldwinter.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'There is a football field and around it is a track. Kids often use the field and track before and after school.'
+	'There is a football field near the school with a large track circling around it. Students often use the field and track before and after school.'
 
-	if week = 5 and hour >= 16 and hour <= 18: 'As you pass by the sports field you hear lots of cheering and yelling coming from the younger kids on the field. As you approach you see '+iif(socialchg['tLazar_day'] ! daystart, '<a href="exec: gt ''gschool_socialchg1'', ''tLazar''">Lazar</a>', 'Lazar')+' is on the football field showing off his skills.'
+	if week = 5 and hour >= 16 and hour <= 18: 'As you pass by the sports field, you hear lots of cheering and yelling coming from the younger kids on the field. As you approach, you see '+iif(socialchg['tLazar_day'] ! daystart, '<a href="exec: gt ''gschool_socialchg1'', ''tLazar''">Lazar</a>', 'Lazar')+' on the football field showing off his skills.'
 
 	if (week = 1 or week = 3) and hour >= 16 and hour <= 18: 'Looking toward what you can barely describe as a running track, you notice '+iif(socialchg['tSvyatoslav_day'] ! daystart, '<a href="exec: gt ''gschool_socialchg1'', ''tSvyatoslav''">Svyatoslav</a>', 'Svyatoslav')+' doing sprints by the football field.'
 
@@ -362,7 +362,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sports':
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/school/grounds/runwinter.jpg"></center>'
 			end
-			'You spend an hour on the track going for a run.'
+			'You spend an hour running on the track.'
 
 			act 'Continue': gt 'gschool_grounds', 'sports'
 		end
@@ -370,7 +370,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sports':
 		'You could go for a run here if you were wearing sports clothes and shoes.'
 	end
 
-	if hour >= 9 and hour < 18 and StoryLine > 0 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and kanikuli = 0: 'With the school open you can go to the <a href="exec: minut += 1 & gt ''gschool_grounds'', ''change_room''">changing rooms</a> by the gym and change your outfit.'
+	if hour >= 9 and hour < 18 and StoryLine > 0 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and kanikuli = 0: 'With the school open, you can go to the <a href="exec: minut += 1 & gt ''gschool_grounds'', ''change_room''">changing rooms</a> by the gym and change your outfit.'
 
 	if week = 6 and SchoolSorev = 2 and hour = 10 and SchoolBlock = 0:
 		*nl
@@ -398,10 +398,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sports':
 	! Giving football preference, since there''s no indoor option for it.
 	if temper => 15 and sunWeather = 1 and hour > 8 and hour < 12 and week = 6 and fbpickupDay + 14 <= daystart and bbpickupDay ! daystart:
 		*nl
-		'As you pass by the sports field you notice that most of the ''jocks'' have gathered around the <a href="exec: gt ''fbgameout'', ''start''">football field</a>.'
+		'As you pass by the sports field, you notice that most of the jocks have gathered around the <a href="exec: gt ''fbgameout'', ''start''">football field</a>.'
 	elseif temper => 15 and sunWeather = 1 and hour > 8 and hour < 12 and week = 6 and bbpickupDay + 14 <= daystart and fbpickupDay ! daystart:
 		*nl
-		'As you pass by the sports field you notice that most of the ''jocks'' have gathered around the <a href="exec: gt ''bbgameout'', ''start''">basketball court</a>.'
+		'As you pass by the sports field, you notice that most of the jocks have gathered around the <a href="exec: gt ''bbgameout'', ''start''">basketball court</a>.'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -436,8 +436,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bulding':
 	if dimaRevenge = 1:
 		menu_off = 1
 		'You''re in a good mood today as you enter the school. That changes when Dimka stops you in the hall on the way to class.
-		"I know what you did, bitch. Did you really thing I wouldn''t figure out it was you that wiped my harddrive."
-		Before you can deny anything he continues: "I don''t even need that video to ruin your life. Just you wait. Soon the whole school will know what a whore you are."
+		"I know what you did, bitch. Did you really thing I wouldn''t figure out it was you that wiped my hard drive?"
+		Before you can deny anything, he continues: "I don''t even need that video to ruin your life. Just you wait. Soon the whole school will know what a whore you are."
 		His words fill you with dread as you make your way to class.'
 	end
 
@@ -470,13 +470,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bulding':
 		npc_rel['A18'] = 0
 		christinaQW['dompath'] = 7
 		if LariskaHomeIn < 1:LariskaHomeIn = 1
-		'Lariska tells you that you crushed Christina''s spirit when she lost that fight to you, and that there''s no fight left in her now. Sounds like Coach Pavlovich took your threat seriously too, as she was kicked from both the Cheerleading Squad and the Track team.'
+		'Lariska tells you that you crushed Christina''s spirit when she lost that fight to you, and that there''s no fight left in her now. It sounds like Coach Pavlovich took your threat seriously too, as she was kicked from both the cheerleading squad and the track team.'
 		
 	elseif (week = 1 or week = 3 or week = 5) and christinaQW['fight'] = -1 and christinaQW['subpath'] = 3:
 		menu_off = 1
 		npc_rel['A18'] = 0
-		'Christina approaches you and says, "Have you recovered from your ass-kicking yet? At least you understand your place now, looking forward to after P.E. class today!"'
-		'"W-What happens after P.E. class?"'
+		'Christina approaches you. "Have you recovered from your ass-kicking yet? At least you understand your place now. I''m looking forward to after P.E. class today!"'
+		'"W-What happens after P.E. class?" you meekly ask.'
 		'Without answering, she simply smirks at you and walks away.'
 	end
 end
@@ -488,7 +488,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'KristinaFight':
 	christinaQW['dompath'] = 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/christina/school/fight.mp4"></video></center>'
-	'As you cross the school yard after school, you are surprised by something heavy slamming into your back. Falling to your hands and knees, you look behind you and see Christina, her face contorted with rage. "You fucking bitch! How dare you spread shit about me? I''ll break your fucking face in!"'
+	'As you cross the school yard after school, you are surprised by something heavy slamming into your back. Falling to your hands and knees, you look behind you and see Christina, her face contorted with rage. "You fucking bitch! How dare you spread shit about me? I''ll smash your fucking face in!"'
 	act 'Fight her':
 		gs 'fight', 'initFight'
 		gs 'fight_npcdata', 'christina'
@@ -569,7 +569,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SchoolRun_result':
 	else
 		swinbeg += 1
 		grupvalue[2] += 5
-		'You run as fast as you can, and manage to reach the finish line before anyone else. First place! Mr. Pavlovich, the P.E. teacher at your school, congratulates you on winning the competition, as you walk around with your arms raised in triumph.'
+		'You run as fast as you can, and manage to reach the finish line first. Mr. Pavlovich, the P.E. teacher at your school, congratulates you on winning the competition as you walk around with your arms raised in triumph.'
 	end
 
 	run_exp += 1
@@ -681,7 +681,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SchoolRun2_result':
 	else
 		swinbeggor += 1
 		grupvalue[2] += 5
-		'You run as fast as you can, and manage to reach the finish line before anyone else. First place! Mr. Pavlovich, the P.E. teacher at your school, congratulates you on winning the competition yet again while you walk around with your arms raised in triumph.'
+		'You run as fast as you can, and manage to reach the finish line first. Mr. Pavlovich, the P.E. teacher at your school, congratulates you on winning the competition yet again while you walk around with your arms raised in triumph.'
 	end
 
 	run_exp += 1
@@ -715,7 +715,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'SchoolRun2_result':
 			'Lina stands at at the finish line, gasping for breath. Even though you beat her, she flashes you a bright smile in congratulations.'
 		else
 			npc_rel['A18'] -= 10
-			'Christina is gasping for breath at the finish line. She was unable to overtake you, and came second yet again. You just flash her a teethy grin and continue your victory lap. Through clenched teeth Christina growls at you. "You bitch!"'
+			'Christina is gasping for breath at the finish line. She was unable to overtake you, and came second yet again. You just flash her a toothy grin and continue your victory lap. Through clenched teeth Christina growls at you. "You bitch!"'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -758,12 +758,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'change_room':
 		end
 	end
 	*nl
-	'The locker room is accessed through the school gym, and is left unlocked until 18:30 each day, to be utilised by students using the sports ground for training and events outside school hours. The room is cold, damp and filled with lockers, benches, and not much else. You can <a href="exec: gt ''wardrobe'', ''start''">change your outfit</a> by the lockers here'+iif(pirsA + pirsB + pirsC + pirsD + pirsE + pirsF + pirsN + pirsG + pirsGL > 0, ', and <a href="exec:dynamic $pirManage">manage your piercings</a>', '.')+''
+	'The locker room is accessed through the school gym, and is left unlocked until 18:30 each day for the use of students using the sports ground for training and events outside school hours. The room is cold, damp and filled with lockers, benches and not much else. You can <a href="exec: gt ''wardrobe'', ''start''">change your outfit</a> by the lockers here'+iif(pirsA + pirsB + pirsC + pirsD + pirsE + pirsF + pirsN + pirsG + pirsGL > 0, ', and <a href="exec:dynamic $pirManage">manage your piercings</a>', '.')+''
 	*nl
 	'You can access your <a href="exec: quick_dress = 1 & gt ''wardrobe'', ''default''">default clothing</a> options directly.'
 
 	if (hour = 18 and minut >= 30) or hour > 18:
-		'The school is closing for the night and you have to leave so you don''t get stuck here all night.'
+		'The school is closing for the night and you have to leave so you don''t get locked in all night.'
 		exit
 	end