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[text edit] Sentence structure.

Jan Bracker 5 years ago
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      locations/experiment.qsrc

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locations/experiment.qsrc

@@ -94,7 +94,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'deskTalk:shout':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\shared\clinic\experiment\shout.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"Calm damn miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, or I will be forced to call a security!" the woman yells as she tries to calm you down.'
+	'"Calm down miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, or I will be forced to call a security!" the woman yells as she tries to calm you down.'
 	'"You can all go to hell, all of you and your medical experiments!" you yell back.'
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'poli', 'start'
@@ -209,7 +209,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'testarea:start':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images\locations\shared\clinic\experiment\nurse2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
-	'"Hello miss, you are here for the experimental treatment?" an other nurse asks you.'
+	'"Hello miss, you are here for the experimental treatment?" another nurse asks you.'
 	'"Yes, I have the confirmed form right here." you hand over the form.'
 	'"Okay, very well. But before we start, we need to double check a couple of facts, if you don''t mind." she tells you.'
 	'She brings up a new form and begins to ask you questions, taking notes:'
@@ -2676,11 +2676,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'testarea:treatment:impreg:shout:punish:kickout':
 	minut += 5
 	'When they are finally done with you, one by one they leave the room and you crumble to the ground, filled with and covered by thick layers of jizz.'
 	'Far too exhausted, you can barely move, much less say anything. The only thing heard in the room for a moment is your hard, shaky breathing.'
-	'"Filthy whore, get up! We''re done with you, to the real world back you go!" He grabs you by your hair, forcing you to get up. Like this he drags you naked and cum covered through the hallway to the reception.'
+	'"Filthy whore, get up! We''re done with you, back to the real world you go!" He grabs you by your hair, forcing you to get up. Like this he drags you naked and cum covered through the hallway to the reception.'
 	*nl
-	'"Nurse get her junk. I order have to kick her out!" The nurse nods to him before looking down at you. You expected to see pity in her eyes, but she looks at you with disgust and disdain. She quickly shuffles off behind a door and in a few minutes returns carrying a plastic bag with your clothing inside.'
-	'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, in this bag are your things and payment for you...services. Take it and get out." the nurse starts explaining.'
-	'"No! Give me that," he says before snatching the bag from her. With a twisted smile, he looks down at you, "Doctor give me order so I kick her out!" and without another word, he grabs you and drags you to the entrance.'
+	'"Nurse get her junk. I order to have her kicked out!" The nurse nods to him before looking down at you. You expected to see pity in her eyes, but she looks at you with disgust and disdain. She quickly shuffles off behind a door and in a few minutes returns carrying a plastic bag with your clothing inside.'
+	'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, this bag contains your things and payment for your... services. Take it and get out." the nurse starts explaining.'
+	'"No! Give me that!", he says before snatching the bag from her. With a twisted smile, he looks down at you, "The doctor gave me an order, so I kick her out!" and without another word, he grabs you and drags you to the entrance.'
 	*nl
 	'<i>He''s going to kick me out of the clinic hall like this? Naked and covered in cum? Really?!</i>'
 	*nl