Text for apartments improved

locations/Cum_Manage.qsrc

@@ -540,7 +540,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cumeater':
 
 		if cloc = 13:
 			gs 'cum_cleanup', 'cleanloc', cloc
-			'You carefully lick the sperm residue from both hands, enjoying the tart taste of semen.'
+			'You carefully lick the sperm residue from your hands, enjoying the tart taste.'
 		else
 			if cloc = 0:
 				$part = 'pussy'
@@ -577,9 +577,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cumeater':
 			end
 
 			if rand(0, 1) = 0:
-				'You collect a handful of sperm from your <<$part>> in your hand and lick it all up, enjoying the tart taste of semen.'
+				'You collect a handful of sperm from your <<$part>> in your hand and lick it up, enjoying the tart taste.'
 			else
-				'You collect the sperm from your <<$part>> with your fingers and lick them, enjoying the tart taste of semen.'
+				'You collect the sperm from your <<$part>> with your fingers and lick them, enjoying the tart taste.'
 			end
 
 			gs 'cum_cleanup', 'cleanloc', cloc
@@ -726,19 +726,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cum_stat_display':
 		elseif i = 11:
 			if pcs_haircol = 0:
 				$cum_face_image = 'brown/'
-				$cum_face_image += rand(1, 31)
+				$cum_face_image += rand(1,31)
 			elseif pcs_haircol = 1:
 				$cum_face_image = 'black/'
-				$cum_face_image += rand(1, 23)
+				$cum_face_image += rand(1,23)
 			elseif pcs_haircol = 2:
 				$cum_face_image = 'red/'
-				$cum_face_image += rand(1, 19)
+				$cum_face_image += rand(1,19)
 			elseif pcs_haircol = 3:
 				$cum_face_image = 'blonde/'
-				$cum_face_image += rand(1, 25)
+				$cum_face_image += rand(1,25)
 			elseif pcs_haircol > 3:
 				$cum_face_image = 'custom/'
-				$cum_face_image += rand(1, 20)
+				$cum_face_image += rand(1,20)
 			end
 			$txtloc_adj = 'across '
 			$icon_txtloc = 'your face'
@@ -796,9 +796,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cum_stat_display':
 					if (vibratorIN = 1 and i = 0) or (analplugin = 1 and i = 3):
 						$txtproxy = 'being plugged in '
 					elseif i = 0 and cumvolume['<<i>>:<<j>>'] < pcs_vag*5:
-						$txtproxy = 'staying inside of '
+						$txtproxy = 'staying inside '
 					elseif i = 3 and pcs_ass <= 25:
-						$txtproxy = 'staying inside of '
+						$txtproxy = 'staying inside '
 					else
 						if cumvolume['<<i>>:<<j>>'] > 250:
 							$txtproxy = 'gushing out of '
@@ -807,7 +807,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cum_stat_display':
 						elseif cumvolume['<<i>>:<<j>>'] >= 40:
 							$txtproxy = 'seeping out of '
 						else
-							$txtproxy = 'staying inside of '
+							$txtproxy = 'staying inside '
 						end
 					end
 				elseif j >= 5:
@@ -960,30 +960,30 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'cum_stat_display':
 		if cumloc[6] = 1:
 			stat_visible_cum = 1
 			if $stat_visible_cum_temp ! '': $stat_visible_cum_temp += ', '
-			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'your clothes near your groin'
+			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'on your clothes near your groin'
 		end
 		if cumloc[7] = 1:
 			stat_visible_cum = 1
 			if $stat_visible_cum_temp ! '': $stat_visible_cum_temp += ', '
-			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'your clothes'
+			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'on your clothes'
 		end
 		if cumloc[11] = 1:
 			stat_visible_cum = 1
 			if $stat_visible_cum_temp ! '': $stat_visible_cum_temp += ', '
-			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'your face'
+			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'on your face'
 		end
 		if cumloc[13] = 1:
 			stat_visible_cum = 1
 			if $stat_visible_cum_temp ! '': $stat_visible_cum_temp += ', '
-			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'your hands'
+			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'on your hands'
 		end
 		if cumloc[16] = 1:
 			stat_visible_cum = 1
 			if $stat_visible_cum_temp ! '': $stat_visible_cum_temp += ', '
-			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'your hair'
+			$stat_visible_cum_temp += 'in your hair'
 		end
 
-		$stat_visible_cum_msg = 'People can see the cum on '+ $stat_visible_cum_temp + '.'
+		$stat_visible_cum_msg = 'People can see the cum '+ $stat_visible_cum_temp + '.'
 	end
 	cum_loc['vagina'] = cumloc[0]
 	cum_loc['labia'] = cumloc[1]

locations/balkon.qsrc

@@ -16,14 +16,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/balcony_underwear1.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 
-	'You step out on the balcony. As you step out on the balcony you feel a light breeze making you a bit chilly.'
+	'You feel a light breeze as you step out on the balcony, making you feel a little chilly.'
 
 	if hour >= 0 and hour <= 6:
 		'It''s dark outside. The street lamps brighten the empty streets below.'
 	elseif hour = 7:
-		'The sun is dawning outside, the birds are waking up and are happily chirping.'
+		'A new day is dawning outside and the birds are happily chirping.'
 	elseif hour >= 8 and hour <= 19:
-		'It''s quite nice outside today. The busy streets are reflecting that, there are lot of people walking at a fast pace.'
+		'It''s quite nice outside today and the streets are busy.'
 	elseif hour >= 20 and hour <= 23:
 		'It''s twilight and the street lights are dimly lit. There''s far less movement on the streets.'
 	end
@@ -32,12 +32,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		if sosedBalDay ! daystart:
 			if rand(1, 4) = 4:
 				'A neighbor from the opposite building is out on his balcony and looking your way. He''s noticed that you''re naked...'
-				act 'Look at the neighbor':gt 'balkon2', 'sosed'
+				act 'Look at the neighbor': gt 'balkon2', 'sosed'
 			else
-				'A neighbor from the opposite building is out on his balcony and looking your way. You feel a bit creeped out that he''s following you closely with his gaze.'
+				'A neighbor from the opposite building is out on his balcony and looking your way. You feel a little creeped out that he''s following you closely with his gaze.'
 			end
 		else
-			'No one notices that you''re standing naked on your balcony. You feel a bit dejected that no one payed you any attention.'
+			'No one notices that you''re standing naked on your balcony. You feel a little dejected that no one payed you any attention.'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	
 	act 'Approach the railing':gt 'balkon2', 'niz'
 	
-	if siga >= 1:act 'Light a cigarette':gt 'balkon2', 'kurit'
+	if siga >= 1: act 'Light a cigarette':gt 'balkon2', 'kurit'
 	if joint > 0 and jointhigh = 0: act 'Smoke a joint': gs 'drugs', 'joint' & gt 'balkon', 'start'
 	if pcs_horny >= 50 and pcs_inhib > 30: act 'Masturbate':gt 'balkon2', 'masopt'	
 end

locations/balkon2.qsrc

@@ -3,21 +3,19 @@
 menu_off = 1
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'kurit':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	minut += 10
 	gs 'drugs', 'smoke'
 	pcs_sleep += 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/kurit.jpg"></center>'
-	'You put the cigarette in your mouth and tightly squeeze it with your lips as you light it. You inhale the smoke by taking a deep breath and holding it in your mouth for a moment. You continue on enjoying the cigarette as it diminishes...'
+	'You put the cigarette in your mouth and tightly squeeze it with your lips as you light it. You inhale the smoke and hold it in for for a second before continuing and enjoying your smoke.'
 
-	act 'Throw the cigarette butt over the railing...':gt 'balkon', 'start'
+	act 'Throw the cigarette butt over the railing': gt 'balkon', 'start'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'demo1':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	sosedBalDay = daystart
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><font size="5" color="maroon"><b>Balcony</b></font></center>'
@@ -30,17 +28,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'demo1':
 		gs 'arousal', 'flash', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 	end
 
-	'<center>You defiantly pose on the balcony, to the delight of your neighbor. He eagerly looks at you while furiously masturbating. 5 minutes later he cums and returns to his apartment.</center>'
-	
+	'<center>You defiantly pose on the balcony, much to the delight of your neighbor. He eagerly looks at you while furiously masturbating before he cums and returns to his apartment.</center>'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	act 'Further':gt 'balkon', 'start'
+	act 'Continue': gt 'balkon', 'start'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'palec1':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	pcs_horny += rand(10,30)
 	minut += 1
 	sosedBalDay = daystart
@@ -49,14 +45,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'palec1':
 	if $pantyworntype ! 'none':'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/fuckyou_underwear.jpg"></center>'
 	if $pantyworntype = 'none':'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/reactions/fuckyou_naked.jpg"></center>'
 
-	'<center>You flip off the neighbor. As he''s been found out he quickly heads back indoors.</center>'
+	'<center>You flip off the neighbor, who quickly heads back indoors.</center>'
 
-	act 'Further':gt 'balkon', 'start'
+	act 'Further': gt 'balkon', 'start'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'niz':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 
@@ -71,7 +66,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'niz':
 		end
 
 		act 'Enjoy the view':
-			cls
+			cla
 			if hour >= 8 and hour <= 19:
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/bal1.jpg"></center>'
 			else
@@ -83,23 +78,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'niz':
 			act 'Further':gt 'balkon', 'start'
 		end
 	else
-		'This was probably a bad decision, you feel a bit light headed as you had no idea that your apartment was so high. You don''t feel comfortable standing on your balcony while being drunk...'
+		'This was probably a bad decision. You feel a little light headed and don''t feel comfortable standing on your balcony drunk...'
 
-		act 'Further':gt 'balkon', 'start'
+		act 'Continue': gt 'balkon', 'start'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'sosed':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	minut += 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon">Balcony</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sosed.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>You notice your neighbor to the left standing on his balcony. As he notices that you''re naked he begins staring at you…</center>'
+	'<center>You notice your neighbor to the left standing on his balcony, staring at your naked body.</center>'
 	
 	if exhibitionist_lvl > 0:
-		act 'Show off your body':gt 'balkon2', 'demo1'
+		act 'Show off your body': gt 'balkon2', 'demo1'
 		gs 'willpower', 'exhib', 'self'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 			act 'Flip him off (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -123,33 +117,27 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sosed':
 		else	
 			act 'Show off your body (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end
-		act 'Flip him off ':gt 'balkon2', 'palec1'
+		act 'Flip him off': gt 'balkon2', 'palec1'
 	end
 	
 end
 
 !!!Probably CV edition
 if $ARGS[0] = 'masopt':
-	cla
-	*clr
-	gs 'stat'
+	*clr & cla
 	if pcs_inhib < 30:inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 	pcs_mood += 15
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_dildo.jpg"></center>'
 
 	if dildo = 1:
 		act 'Rub your clit with the dildo':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			pcs_vag += rand(0, 2)
-
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_dildo<<rand(1, 2)>>.jpg"></center>'
-
-			'You begin to rub yourself, having your hand moving in small circles as you feel your wetness growing. Feeling aroused enough you take out your dildo and begin teasing your clit by gently rubbing the area.'
-			'As you stop teasing yourself, you slowly push the head inside your vagina. You slowly begin to fuck yourself picking up the pace. The feeling of your inside being stretched out is great and you let out a quiet wimp as you keep on playing with the dildo.'
+			'You start rubbing yourself, gradually building up a wetness between your legs. Feeling aroused enough, you take out your dildo and start teasing your clit by gently rubbing it.'
+			'You then slowly push the head inside your pussy and start slowly fucking yourself, gradually picking up the pace. The feeling of your pussy being stretched out is overwhelming and you let out a quiet whimper as you continue fucking yourself.'
 			$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-			$orgasm_txt = 'After pleasuring yourself intensely with the dildo for a few minutes and as you reach orgasm you try to keep your voice down as you don''t want to get exposed.'
-			
+			$orgasm_txt = 'After pleasuring yourself intensely with the dildo for a few minutes, you try to keep your voice down as you reach orgasm.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'exhibitionism'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -158,94 +146,81 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'masopt':
 		end
 
 		act 'Play with your ass':
-			cla
-			*clr
-			pcs_ass += rand(0, 2)
+			*clr & cla
+			pcs_ass += rand(0,2)
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_anal1.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'You begin rubbing yourself building up a wetness between your legs. As you''re playing with your clit your horniness takes over and you begin fantasizing on using a different hole today...'
-			'As you keep inserting your fingers inside the vagina, it keeps building up a wetness making your fingers wet and slippery. As you pull out your fingers you begin brushing one of your fingers against the sphincter, giving yourself a little tickle.'
-			'Before you know it you take a deep breath and insert one of your finger in your anus, probing it as it gives you a jolting sensation...'
-			
+			'You start rubbing yourself, gradually building up a wetness between your legs. As you play with your clit, your horniness takes over and you start fantasizing about using a different hole today...'
+			'You brush one of your wet fingers against your anus before you take a deep breath and insert it, probing your ass as a wave of pleasure flows through you.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'anal_finger', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			act 'Use the dildo':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_anal2.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'As you''re pleasuring yourself inserting the finger in and out, you grab your dildo and begin sucking on it, trying to lube it as much as you can.'
-				'Not being able to contain yourself you remove the dildo from your mouth and slowly insert it into your anus. At first you feel discomfort but the amazing feeling as the dildo penetrates makes you forget all about it.'
-				'As your anus eases you start to pump away the dildo at a faster speed. The sexual pleasure you''re experiencing is greater than anything you''ve ever known would be possible to feel.'
+				'As you''re pleasuring yourself with your finger, you grab your dildo and start sucking it, trying to lube it as much as you can.'
+				'Not able to contain yourself, you remoce your finger and slowly insert the dildo into your ass. You feel discomfort at first, but the pleasant feeling of the dildo penetrating you makes you forget all about it.'
+				'As your anus relaxes, you start thrusting the dildo at a faster speed, gradually feeling your arousal growing.'
 				
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-				$orgasm_txt = 'Within seconds an orgasm overwhelms you in a long, slow, intense wave after wave of pure pleasure.'
-				
+				$orgasm_txt = 'Within seconds, an orgasm overwhelms you in an intense wave of pure pleasure.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5, 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 
-				act 'Go back':gt 'balkon', 'start'
+				act 'Go back': gt 'balkon', 'start'
 			end
 		end
 	end
 
 	act 'Masturbate':
-		cla
-		*clr
-		pcs_vag += rand(0, 1)
+		*clr & cla
+		pcs_vag += rand(0,1)
 		gt 'balkon2', 'finger'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'finger':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-1.jpg"></center>'
-	'Standing naked in the open is making you aroused. Feeling embolded you engulfing your fingers into your mouth preparing them for what''s to come.'
-	
+	'Standing naked in the open is arousing you. Feeling emboldened, you stick your fingers in your mouth, preparing them for what''s to come...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'exhibitionism', 'masturbate'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	act 'Rub your clit':
-		cla
-		*clr
+		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-2.jpg"></center>'
-		'As the fingers are coated in saliva, you run your fingers down your body not stopping before your juicy puffed pussy lips. You take your fingers and slowly begin rubbing your clit as you feel the first surge of pleasure consuming you.'
+		'You run your wet fingers down your body and stop at your pussy lips. You slowly start rubbing your clit as you feel the first surge of pleasure consuming you.'
 		$orgasm_or = 'no'
 		gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 3, 'masturbate', 'exhibitionism'
 		gs 'stat'
 
-		act 'Insert fingers':
-			cla
-			*clr
+		act 'Insert your fingers':
+			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-3.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you play with yourself you begin to rub your clit a little bit faster. By now your clit is swelling with desire, and as you can''t ignore it anymore, you take your middle finger and insert it into your vagina.' 
-			'As you ease into it you shut your eyes by the pleasant feeling as you speed up your hand movements.'
+			'Your clit is now swelling with desire, and you can''t ignore it any longer. You take your middle finger and insert it into your pussy.' 
+			'As you ease into it, you close your eyes as you speed up your movements.'
 			
 			$orgasm_or = 'no'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 5, 'masturbate', 'exhibitionism'
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			act 'Open your eyes':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-4.jpg"></center>'
 				if exhibitionist_lvl > 0:
 					gs 'arousal', 'flash', 2
-					'As you open your eyes, you lock eyes with one of your neighbors peering out the window in the house across...'
-					'You can''t help but smile as there''s someone enjoying the show...'
-					
-					act 'Give him a show':gt 'balkon2', 'finger_solo'					
+					'When you open your eyes, you notice one of your neighbors peering out the window at you.'
+				
+					act 'Give him a show': gt 'balkon2', 'finger_solo'					
 				else
 					$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-					$orgasm_txt = 'Overtaken by the thrill of the risk of being caught in such a compromising act and the diligent work of your skilled fingers brings you to an intense orgasm. Before you know it you grip the railing for support as your juices squirt hard out of you.'
-					'The orgasm is so intense that you''re seeing stars and it almost feels like you''re going to pass out. Somehow you manage to keep your composure as you quickly head back inside as you feel too exposed.'
-					
+					$orgasm_txt = 'Overtaken by the thrill of the risk of being caught in such a compromising act and the diligent work of your skilled fingers, you bring yourself to to an intense orgasm. You grip the railing for support as your juices squirt out of you.'
+					'Your orgasm is so intense that you''re seeing stars and it almost feels like you''re going to pass out. You somehow manage to keep your composure before you quickly head back inside.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 2, 'masturbate'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 
-					act 'Head back inside':dynamic $brodils
+					act 'Head back inside': dynamic $brodils
 				end
 			end
 		end
@@ -253,77 +228,69 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'finger':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'finger_solo':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-5.jpg"></center>'
-	'Ignoring everything around you, you re-focus on yourself once again. You begin teasing yourself, pressing your fingers on your already throbbing clit. It doesn''t take long before you slide your fingers inside the pussy, as you begin to squirm by the sensation.'
+	'Ignoring everything around you, you re-focus on yourself once again and start teasing yourself, pressing your fingers on your already throbbing clit. It doesn''t take long before you slide your fingers inside your pussy, causing you to squirm at the sensation.'
 
 	$orgasm_or = 'no'
 	gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 3, 'masturbate', 'exhibitionism'
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	act 'Keep it up':
-		cla
-		*clr
+		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-6.jpg"></center>'
-		'Slowly pacing the speed your fingers enter your pussy, you begin to feel you tight walls becoming wet and sticky with your own juices as it drips onto the ground while your mind is obsessed by the feeling that you need to increase the pace."'
+		'Slowly pacing the speed at which your fingers enter your pussy, you feel your tight walls becoming wet and sticky with your own juices as they drip onto the ground.'
 
 		$orgasm_or = 'no'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 3, 'masturbate', 'exhibitionism'
 		gs 'stat'
 
 		act 'Faster':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-7.jpg"></center>'
-			'You pick up the pace as you begin fantasizing about being taken like this in the open... You use your finger frantically as it slides in and out of your vagina with ease.'
+			'You pick up the pace as you fantasize about being taken like this in the open, your finger frantically sliding in and out of your soaking wet pussy with ease.'
 
 			$orgasm_or = 'no'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 3, 'masturbate', 'exhibitionism'
 			gs 'stat'
 
 			act 'Faster':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-8.jpg"></center>'
-				'You are way too horny to pace yourself now, as you use one more finger to stretch out your inside, expanding the pleasant feeling. While trying your hardest to keep as quiet as possible, the walls begin to crumble as you begin moaning making sure that your closest neighbours can hear you.'
+				'You''re way too horny to pace yourself now and insert another finger, expanding the pleasant feeling.'
 
 				$orgasm_or = 'no'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 3, 'masturbate', 'exhibitionism'
 				gs 'stat'
 
 				act 'Just a little more':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-9.jpg"></center>'
-					'By now you''re loudly moaning not caring if anyone hears you as your fingers inside are hitting your g-spot. You make one last effort and pump your vagina as you feel a...'
+					'By now, you''re loudly moaning, not caring if anyone hears you as your fingers hit your g-spot. You make one last effort and thrust your fingers deep inside you as you feel a...'
 
 					$orgasm_or = 'no'
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 3, 'masturbate', 'exhibitionism'
 					gs 'stat'
 
 					act 'Climax':
-						cla
-						*clr
+						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_orgasm.jpg"></center>'
-						
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
-						$orgasm_txt = 'Within seconds your toes curl as you feel a wave of ecstasy sweeping all over your body, your legs and hands are shaking in delight of a possibility that someone might have noticed you.'
-						'After a few moments you withdraw your fingers from your stretched vagina, still pulsating from the intense orgasm.'
+						$orgasm_txt = 'Within seconds, your toes curl as you feel a wave of ecstasy sweeping all over your body, your legs and hands shaking in delight of a possibility that someone might have noticed you.'
+						'After a few seconds, you remove your fingers from your pussy, which is still pulsating from the intense orgasm.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 3, 'masturbate', 'exhibitionism'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
 
 						act 'Get dressed':
-							cla
-							*clr
+							*clr & cla
 							minut += 5
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/balcony_mas1-10.jpg"></center>'
-							'As you come to your senses you can hear some of your neighbours applauding your performance. You decide giving them one last show as you stand up and suck the sticky cream slowly from your fingers, savouring the memory.'
-							'As you finish you give everyone a playful wave as you get dressed.'
+							'As you come to your senses, you can hear some of your neighbours applauding your performance. You decide giving them one last show as you stand up and slowly suck your juices from your fingers, savouring the memory.'
+							'As you finish, you give everyone a playful wave as you get dressed.'
 
-							act 'Leave':gt 'balkon', 'start'
+							act 'Leave': gt 'balkon', 'start'
 						end
 					end
 				end

locations/bed.qsrc

@@ -1,7 +1,6 @@
 # bed
 if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	shour = 24 - hour
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -13,8 +12,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'mast':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	if pcs_inhib < 30:inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 	pcs_mood += 15
@@ -23,24 +21,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mast':
 	if husband > 0 and STRPOS('bedr,bedr2x,korr,korr2x',$loc) > 0 and husbandrink ! 10:
 		if dildo > 0:
 			if week > 5 or (week < 6 and hour > 16):
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m21.jpg"></center>'
-				'You bend over and start fucking your pussy with your dildo'
-				
+				'You bend over and start fucking your pussy with your dildo.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 15
 				gs 'stat'
 
-				if hour > 22 or hour < 7:'<<$husName>> looks at you, obviously a little dumbfounded.'
+				if hour > 22 or hour < 7:'<<$husName>> looks at you, a little dumbfounded.'
 				if hour >= 7 and hour <= 22:'Once you get into it, <<$husName>> enters the room.'
 				if harakHusb = 0:
-					'"What are you doing dear?" he asks.'
-					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it, and you''ve been busy, " you reply, without stopping.'
+					'"What are you doing?" he asks.'
+					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it, and you''ve been busy," you reply without stopping.'
 					'"How often do you do this?" he asks.'
-					'"Quite often, sometime in my ass, you want to see?" you ask'
+					'"Quite often, sometimes in my ass. you want to see?" you ask.'
 					if izvratH = 0:
 						husband -= 1
-						'"I''ll wait outside the door until you''re done." he says and leaves. You continue to satisfy yourself rapidly, and soon finish.'
+						'"I''ll wait outside the door until you''re done," he says and leaves. You continue to satisfy yourself rapidly, and soon finish.'
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 5, 'masturbate'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -48,28 +44,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mast':
 
 						act 'Finish':gt 'bed', 'start'
 					elseif izvratH = 1:
-						'"Well, I don''t know." he stammers.'
-						'"Come on." You encourage him'
+						'"Oh. I don''t know..." he stammers.'
+						'"Come on," you encourage him.'
 
-						act 'Show':
-							cla
-							*clr
+						act 'Show him':
+							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m22.jpg"></center>'
-							'You pull the dildo from your pussy and winking at your husband, insert the dildo in your anus. <<$husName>> watches closely as the dildo disappears in and out of your ass.'
-							'You see how his pants swell. "Anything else you want, dear?" you ask, smiling.'
+							'You pull the dildo out of your pussy and, winking at your husband, insert it into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely as the dildo disappears into your ass.'
+							'You see how his pants swell. "Anything else you want, dear?" you ask while smiling.'
 							'"Can I join?" he asks, a little embarrassed.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5, 'masturbate'
 							gs 'stat'
 
 							act 'Invite':
-								cla
-								*clr
+								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m23.jpg"></center>'
-								'<<$husName>> gets his dick out and starts masturbating. It is not what you expected, and at first you feel a little sad that he didn''t enter into you, but began to masturbate.'
-								'Then it starts to hit you, watching your husband masturbate as he watches you fuck the dildo, his face covered in pleasure, you scream and fall on the table, having experienced an orgasm.'
-								'The dildo is still sticking out of your ass. While <<$husName>> is still masturbating, looking at you stretched out on the table, you take the dildo from your ass and begin to lick it, looking into your husbands eyes.'
-								'The spectacle has him immediately cum all over the floor. You go to him, kiss him on the lips and he passionately kisses you back...'
-
+								'<<$husName>> gets his dick out and starts masturbating. It''s not what you expected and you feel a little sad that he isn''t fucking you as you start to masturbate.'
+								'You watch your husband masturbate as he watches you, his face covered in pleasure, before you scream and fall on the table, having experienced an orgasm.'
+								'<<$husName>> is still masturbating, looking at you stretched out on the table before you take the dildo out of your ass and start lick it while looking into his eyes.'
+								'The spectacle has him immediately cum all over the floor before you walk over to him and kiss him on the lips. He passionately kisses you back.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5, 'masturbate'
 								$orgasm_or = 'custom'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -81,50 +74,46 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mast':
 					end
 				elseif harakHusb = 1:
 					'"Are you trying to tell me that I''m not enough to satisfy you?" He asks.'
-					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need this, and you''ve been busy." You reply, without stopping.'
-					'"Well then, show me everything now that you know I''ll watch." He says.'
-					'"Want to see me do it in the ass, too?" You offer.'
+					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need this, and you''ve been busy," you reply without stopping.'
+					'"Well then, show me everything now that you know I''ll watch," he says.'
+					'"Want to see me do it in the ass too?" you offer.'
 
 					if izvratH = 0:
 						husband += 1
 						husbizvradd += 1
-						'"No, I think this is enough." He says, sits down on a chair and begins to watch. You continue to satisfy yourself rapidly and soon finish in front of her husband.'
+						'"No, I think this is enough," he says as he sits on a chair and starts watching you. You continue to satisfy yourself rapidly and soon finish in front of him.'
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 5, 'masturbate'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
-						'<<$husName>> stands up and begins to applaud "Bravo, encore?" he laughs.'
-						'"For such a lovely audience, anything, but first an intermission." You laugh. <<$husName>> helps you down from the table.'
-
 						gs 'stat'
-						
-						act 'Finish':gt 'bed', 'start'
+						'<<$husName>> stands up and playfully claps. "Bravo! Encore?" he laughs.'
+						'"Anything for such a lovely audience, but first an intermission," you laugh and <<$husName>> helps you down from the table.'
+
+						act 'Finish': gt 'bed', 'start'
 					elseif izvratH = 1:
 						husband += 1
-						'"Well then, I think you better show me." he said.'
-						'"As you wish." you said'
+						'"Well then, I think you better show me," he says.'
+						'"As you wish," you reply.'
 
 						act 'Show':
-							cla
-							*clr
+							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m22.jpg"></center>'
-							'You pull the dildo out of your pussy and winking at your husband, insert it in your anus. <<$husName>> watches closely as you pump the dildo in and out of your ass.'
-							'You see how his pants swell. "Anything else you want, dear?" you ask, smiling.'
-							'"I don''t just want something, I''ll do something." He says, unbuttoning his pants and brings his cock to your mouth.'
+							'You pull the dildo out of your pussy and, winking at your husband, insert it into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely as you slide the dildo in and out of your ass.'
+							'You see how his pants swell. "Anything else you want, dear?" you ask while smiling.'
+							'"I don''t just want something, I''ll do something!" he replies, unbuttoning his pants and brings his cock to your mouth.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5
 							gs 'stat'
 
 							act 'Suck him':
-								cla
-								*clr
+								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m24.jpg"></center>'
-								'You take his flaccid penis in your mouth and start sucking, while you continue to drive the dildo into your ass.'
+								'You take his flaccid penis in your mouth and start sucking while continuing to drive the dildo into your ass.'
 								'When his cock has finally hardened, <<$husName>> stops you. "Now I''ll take this hole."'
-
 								gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 5
 								gs 'arousal', 'bj', -5
 								gs 'stat'
 						
-								act 'Substitute ass':
+								act 'Get fucked in the ass':
 									picrand = 89
 									gt 'sex', 'anal'
 								end
@@ -132,38 +121,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mast':
 						end
 					elseif harakHusb = 2:
 						'"Itchy hole?" he asks.'
-						'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it, and you''ve been busy." You reply, without stopping.'
+						'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it, and you''ve been busy," you reply without stopping.'
 
 						if izvratH = 0:
 							husband += 1
 							husbizvradd += 1
-							'"You should have said something, now open your mouth." He says pulling out his cock and forcefully pushes it into your mouth.'
-							'He holds you by the hair and fucks your mouth, telling you not to stop masturbating. Soon he tires of your mouth, "Now enough of this rubber shit, I''m going to fuck you."'
-
+							'"You should have said something. Now open your mouth," he says while pulling out his cock and forcefully pushing it into your mouth.'
+							'He holds you by the hair and fucks your mouth, telling you not to stop masturbating before he tires of your mouth. "Enough of this rubber shit! I''m going to fuck you."'
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10
 							gs 'arousal', 'bj', -10
 							gs 'stat'
-								
+						
 							act 'Spread your legs ':
 								picrand = 89
 								gt 'sex', 'vag'
 							end
 						elseif izvratH = 1:
 							husband += 1
-							'"You''re going to insert this stupid toy in your pussy, ass and mouth, You''ll pulverize them, for as long as I like." He says, sitting down to watch.'
-							'Submissively, you quickly use the dildo to fuck your pussy, ass and mouth.'
-							
+							'"You''re going to insert this stupid toy into your pussy, ass and mouth. You''ll pulverize them for as long as I like," he says while sitting down to watch.'
+							'You quickly and submissively do as you''re told.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 5
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', -5
 							gs 'stat'
 
-							act 'Offer mouth':
-								cla
-								*clr
+							act 'Offer your mouth':
+								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m24.jpg"></center>'
 								'Still using the dildo on your pussy and ass, you offer <<$husName>> your mouth. He gets up and walks over to you.'
-								'You take his flaccid penis and start sucking, until his cock is finally hard. <<$husName>> stops you, "Now I''ll fuck your ass."'
-
+								'You take his flaccid penis and start sucking until his cock is finally hard and he stops you. "Now I''ll fuck your ass."'
 								gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 5
 								gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5
 								gs 'arousal', 'bj', -10
@@ -179,12 +164,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'mast':
 				end
 			else
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Unable to control yourself anymore you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time to attach the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before lowering yourself slowly to it''s tip.'
-				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel that thick head spreading your pussy-lips and soon the whole length begin to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when that delicious cock finally bottoms out in your cunt, sending you to the heavens and back.'
-				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts- soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and time again. It takes you just a few minutes to reach that so wanted orgasm, your toes curling tightly as that wonderful feeling run through your entire body...'
-				'Soon you''re twitching onto that dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a smile grows along your face after cumming so hard there. That was just what you needed!'
-
-				
+				'Unable to control yourself anymore, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time and attach the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before slowly lowering yourself.'
+				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your pussy lips and soon the whole length starts to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when it finally bottoms out inside you, sending you to the heavens and back.'
+				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. You''re soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as a wonderful feeling run through your entire body.'
+				'You''re soon twitching on the dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a smile grows along your face. That was just what you needed!'
 				$orgasm_or = 'custom'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'masturbate'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -214,51 +197,45 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rab':
 	minut += 120
 	houserabday = daystart
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/nicholas/sex/r0.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once you get into bed your mistress comes into the room. "What, my bitch is going to sleep?" She snaps from the doorway.'
-	'"Yes." You reply.'
-	'"Yes, who?" She continues.'
-	'"Yes, mistress." You reply and sit on the bed, she is drunk and barely able to stand on her feet. She is drinking wine from the bottle and spilling quite a bit of it.'
-	'"That''s better, but today you have to be punished." She lifts up her skirt and out pops the strap-on. "Suck it." She commands.'
+	'Once you get into bed, your mistress comes into the room. "What, my bitch is going to sleep?" she snaps from the doorway.'
+	'"Yes..." you meekly reply.'
+	'"Yes, who?" she continues.'
+	'"Yes, mistress..." you reply and sit on the bed. She''s drunk and barely able to stand on her feet as she drinks wine from the bottle, spilling quite a bit of it on the floor.'
+	'"That''s better, but today you have to be punished." She lifts up her skirt and out pops the strap-on. "Suck it," she commands.'
 
 	act 'Suck it':
-		cla
-		*clr
-
+		*clr & cla
+		
 		if analplugIN = 1:analplugIN = 0
 		if pcs_makeup ! 1 and cosmetic_tattoo = 0:pcs_makeup = 0
 
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/nicholas/sex/r1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You take the strap-on in your mouth and start sucking her off. You dislike the taste of rubber and proceed without much enthusiasm. Mistress, though she''s drunk, notices that you''re not trying and starts to thrust along with your movements, driving it deeper into your mouth. You start gagging and don''t like it.'
-		'"Oh damn stubborn bitch, lay down on the bed quickly." With these words, she forcefully pushes you on the bed.'
-
+		'You take the strap-on in your mouth and start sucking her off without much enthusiasm. Mistress, though she''s drunk, notices that you''re not trying and starts to thrust along with your movements, driving it deeper into your mouth and causing you to gag.'
+		'"Oh, damn stubborn bitch! Lie down on the bed. Quickly." She forcefully pushes you on the bed.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		
-		act 'Lie':
-			cla
-			*clr
+		act 'Lie down':
+			*clr cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/nicholas/sex/r2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You lay on the bed and she climbs on top of you and kneels over your face. She makes you open your mouth and forcefully shoves the strap-on in. You try to pull away, but it''s useless, her hands hold your head firmly. She continues to violate your mouth, hardly allowing you to catch a breath of air while she thrust it deeper and deeper. Eventually starting to slip down your throat, cutting off your breath completely. When you''re starting to lose consciousness she takes it out of your throat allowing you to roll onto your side, wheezing sniffling.'
-			'"And now for the punishment, get up bitch." she says. "And what was that just now then?" You think, but you don''t dare to utter that thought.'
-
+			'You lay down on the bed and she climbs on top of you and kneels over your face. She makes you open your mouth and forcefully shoves the strap-on in. You try to pull away, but her hands hold your head firmly. She continues to violate your mouth, hardly allowing you to catch a breath of air while she thrust it deeper and deeper, eventually sliding it down your throat, cutting off your breath completely. When you start to lose consciousness, she finally takes it out, allowing you to roll onto your side, wheezing and sniffling.'
+			'"And now for the punishment. Get up, bitch!" she demands.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub', 'lesbian', 'rough'
 			gs 'stat'
 		
-			act 'Rise in a pose':
-				cla
-				*clr
+			act 'Get up':
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/nicholas/sex/r3.jpg"></center>'
-				'You get up on all fours on the bed. "But it''s too wet." Says your mistress, and wipes your saliva on your ass with the strap-on, "You need to be punished, not pleasured. Spread your ass."'
-				'Realizing that you will get it up the ass, you reach back with your hands and try to relax your ass. But you don''t succeed before the pain pierces your body when she forces the strap-on into your anus and not giving your ass the time to get used to it, starts fucking you at a crazy pace. You let go of your buttocks and seize the blankets with your hands and teeth. Tears pour from your eyes, you whine, but she still continues. Finally, a little tired she lowers the tempo and asks, "Well, does it hurt?"'
-				'"Yes ma''am, it hurts a lot." You gasp through your tears.'
-				'"Well, let''s see how this feels." She says, and begins pouring wine from her bottle onto the strap-on and your ass.'
-				'"Thank you, mistress." You say while she starts gaining momentum again. At first, it gets a little easier, but then stream of wine stops and it starts to dry on your skin. It hurts so much that you start screaming from the pain. "Why hasn''t anyone come in and stopped her." You think, because your screams have been so loud they could have been heard not only inside the apartment, but also in the hallway. But no one came, neither Tanya nor Nicholas. Finally she tires out, removes the strap-on out and walks out of the room without saying a word. You collapse on the bed and whine, your ass is on fire and you''re afraid to even move. After spending an hour so you fall asleep.'
-
+				'You get up on all fours on the bed. "You''re wet," she says and wipes your saliva on your ass with the strap-on, "You need to be punished, not pleasured. Spread your ass."'
+				'You reach back with your hands and try to relax your ass, but you don''t succeed before the pain pierces your body as she forces the strap-on into your anus, not giving your ass the time to get used to it before she starts fucking you at a crazy pace. You grab the blankets with your hands and teeth as tears pour from your eyes and you whine, but she still continues. Growing tired, she lowers the pace. "Well, does it hurt?" she asks.'
+				'"Yes mistress, it hurts a lot!" you gasp through your tears.'
+				'"Well, let''s see how this feels," she says and starts pouring wine from her bottle onto the strap-on and your ass.'
+				'"Thank you, mistress!" you say while she starts gaining momentum again. The wine starts to dry on your skin and hurts so much that you start screaming from the pain. After what feels like an eternity, she tires out, removes the strap-on and leaves the room without saying a word. You collapse on the bed and fall asleep.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap', 5, 'sub', 'lesbian', 'rough'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
 		
-				act 'Sleep':gt 'bed2'
+				act 'Sleep': gt 'bed2'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -274,25 +251,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rab':
 			houserab = 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/nicholas/sex/r4.jpg"></center>'
-			'"No." You reply.'
-			'"You <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>, will suck now or things will get very bad for you." She asserts.'
-			'"No." You answer again.'
-			'"All right, you asked for it." She screams and swings a fist, trying to hit you. You easily dodge the punch and kick her in the stomach.'
-			'"Bitch." She moans, doubling over. You have suffered enough, you jump out of bed and grabbing her head in your hands, knee her in the face.'
-			'She flies into the corner, but you don''t calm down. Remembering the taste of her dirty boots and sneakers you go up to her and start to push a sneaker into her mouth.'
-			'When you can''t shove it in any further, you throw away the sneaker, grab her hair, yank her off the floor and throw her on to the bed.'
-			'Now lying on the bed covering her face with her hands. You jump on the bed, straddling her face and push your pussy against her mouth. "Eat me, bitch." You yell, as she tries to push you away.'
-			'It''s no good, you have her head tight between your thighs. You continue yelling and she starts licking. You feel her tongue on your pussy and start moving your hips, grinding on her face and increasing the pace.'
-			'Soon you get excited. She does not resist and sticks her tongue out and tries to stick it in your pussy. You start enjoying her submissive nature and you get more excited thinking about your dominant actions.'
-			'You have even begun to think about something to do with her strap-on and enjoying this thought, you orgasm. You wipe your crotch in her face and finish. When you finally get off her, her whole face is covered in your juices.'
-			'She quietly gets out of bed, straightens her clothes and leaves the room, "Animal." She obviously won''t forget, from now on you should be careful, who knows what she will do.'
-
+			'"No!" you reply.'
+			'"You will suck now or things will get very bad for you!" she asserts.'
+			'"No!" you answer again.'
+			'"All right, you asked for it!" she screams and swings a fist, trying to hit you. You easily dodge the punch and kick her in the stomach.'
+			'"Bitch!" she moans while doubling over. You''ve suffered enough and jump out of bed, grabbing her head in your hands and kneeing her in the face.'
+			'She flies into the corner, but you don''t calm down. Remembering the taste of her dirty boots and sneakers, you storm up to her and start pushing a sneaker into her mouth.'
+			*nl
+			'When you can''t shove it in any further, you throw the sneaker aside, grab her hair and throw her onto the bed.'
+			'You jump on the bed, straddle her face and push your pussy against her mouth. "Eat me, bitch!" you yell as she tries to push you away.'
+			'You have her head held tight between your thighs, however, and continue yelling. You soon feel her tongue on your pussy and start moving your hips, grinding on her face and increasing the pace.'
+			'She doesn''t resist and tries to stick it in your pussy. You start enjoying her submissive nature and get more excited thinking about your dominant actions.'
+			'You''ve even thought about something to do with her strap-on and enjoying this thought when you orgasm. You wipe your crotch in her face and finish, leaving her whole face covered in your juices.'
+			*nl
+			'She quietly gets out of bed, straightens her clothes and leaves the room. "Animal." You should be careful; who knows what she will do to you in return.'
 			$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 20, 'dom', 'rough'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
 			
-			act 'Breathe':gt 'bed', 'start'
+			act 'Breathe': gt 'bed', 'start'
 		end
 	else
 		act 'Refuse (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
@@ -300,18 +278,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rab':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'vor':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	if rex['owned'] = 1:
 		if dog_bravery = 0:
-			dog_bravery = rand(1, 100)
+			dog_bravery = rand(1,100)
 		end
 
 		if dog_bravery >= 50:
 			minut += 10
-			'You are lying in bed when suddenly there''s a ruckus in the hallway. You get up to check it out and as you arrive you see <<$rex[''name'']>> chase two masked men outside. You can hear loud swearing as they run down the stairs.'
-			'You call your dog''s name and he comes back from the stairway looking calm. His owner is safe, everything is right in the world.'
+			'You''re lying in bed when you suddenly hear a commotion out in the hallway. You get up to check it out and as you arrive, you see <<$rex[''name'']>> chase two masked men outside. You can hear loud swearing as they run down the stairs.'
+			'You call your dog''s name and he comes back from the stairway looking calm.'
 
 			act 'Hug him':
 				cla
@@ -319,23 +296,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vor':
 
 				act 'Check the lock':
 					cla
-					'You check the lock on the door and it appears to be intact. You''re not sure if you forgot to lock the door when you came in or if the lock was picked. Maybe you should have a second one installed.'
+					'You check the lock on the door and it appears to be intact. You''re not sure if you forgot to lock the door when you came in or if the lock was picked. Maybe you should have a second one installed...'
 					act 'Lock the door': gt 'korr'
 				end
 			end
 
 			act 'Check the lock':
 				cla
-				'You check the lock on the door and it appears to be intact. You''re not sure if you forgot to lock the door when you came in or if the lock was picked. Maybe you should have a second one installed.'
+				'You check the lock on the door and it appears to be intact. You''re not sure if you forgot to lock the door when you came in or if the lock was picked. Maybe you should have a second one installed...'
 				act 'Lock the door': gt 'korr'
 			end
 		else
-			'You are lying in bed when you hear sounds from the hallway. You decide to get up and as you get to the door you see two masked men.'
-			'Your dog <<$rex[''name'']>> is shivering in the corner.'
+			'You''re lying in bed when you hear sounds from the hallway. You decide to get up and as you get to the door you see two masked men. <<$rex[''name'']>> is shivering in the corner.'
 			act 'Scream': gt 'bed', 'vor2'
 		end
 	else
-		'You are lying in bed when you hear sounds from the hallway. You decide to get up and as you get to the door you see two masked men.'
+		'You''re lying in bed when you hear sounds from the hallway. You decide to get up and as you get to the door, you see two masked men.'
 		act 'Scream': gt 'bed', 'vor2'
 	end
 end
@@ -344,36 +320,29 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vor2':
 	menu_off = 1
 	minut += 60
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/g0.jpg"></center>'
-
-	'You don''t even have time to open your mouth to scream, when a knife is at your throat. "Scream and I''ll cut you, bitch." Croaks one of them.'
-	'They tie your hands and one goes to search your apartment, while the second guards you. He sits down and studies you, then begins running his knife across your body.'
-	'"You scared?" He asks, and thinking that it is better to keep silent, you say nothing and look at the floor. "So you are scared." he grins.'
-	'Then he begins to feel you up, you try to pull away, but the knife is back at your throat, "Sit still bitch, or the knife might slip, fatally." he croaks, and continues feeling you up.'
-	'Finally, the other intruder returns. "Time we got out of here." He says.'
-	'"Unless we give this juicy little morsel a treat." He sits next to you'
+	'You don''t even have time to open your mouth to scream when a knife is at your throat. "Scream and I''ll cut you, bitch!" one of them croaks.'
+	'They tie your hands and one goes to search your apartment while the second guards you. He sits down and studies you, then starts running his knife across your body.'
+	'"You scared?" he asks. Thinking that it''s better to keep silent, you say nothing and look at the floor. "So you <i>are</i> scared..."'
+	'He starts feeling you up and you try to pull away, but the knife is back at your throat. "Sit still or the knife might slip. Fatally..." he croaks and continues feeling you up.'
+	'The other intruder finally returns. "Time we got out of here," he says. "Unless we give this juicy little morsel a treat," he adds as he sits next to you.'
 
 	if pcs_apprnc >= 120:
 		guy += 2
 		rape += 1
-		'"Hey, sweet cheeks, something tells me you like to fuck." Says the first.'
+		'"Hey, sweet cheeks. Something tells me you like to fuck," the first one says.'
 
 		act 'Plead':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/g1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You are struck with fear. "Well whore, kneel down and open your mouth, if we so much as feel a tooth, I''ll cut your throat from ear to ear" says the second one pulling his cock out.'
-			'You begin pleading with them not to touch you, but they just push you to your knees. He jabs his member against your lips. You reluctantly open your mouth and then his cock is in your mouth.'
-			'His hands clench your head and he begins to fuck your face. Suddenly there''s a second cock by your mouth, and they try to shove both into your mouth, then they look at each other and it seems they aren''t down with their cocks touching.'
-			'In fact it appears that only you are up for this type of treatment, so they go back to the first option and proceeded to rape your mouth one by one. All the time doing and saying everything they can think of to evoke disgust in you.'
-			'After the first couple of minutes you are surprised to notice that their hands are no longer on your head and you are actively bobbing your head and working your tongue.'
-			'"Get her on all fours." Commands one of them.'
-
+			'You''re struck with fear. "Kneel down and open your mouth, whore. If we so much as feel a tooth, I''ll cut your throat from ear to ear!" the second one says while pulling his cock out.'
+			'You start pleading with them, but they just push you to your knees and he jabs his dick against your lips. You reluctantly open your mouth and his cock slides into your mouth.'
+			'His hands clench your head and he starts fucking your face before they start taking turns with you.'
+			'"Get her on all fours," one of them eventually commands.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'rough', 'sub', 'group', 'bound'
 			gs 'stat'
 			
-			act 'Up':
-				cla
-				*clr
+			act 'Get up':
+				*clr & cla
 				orgasm += 1
 				gs 'npcgeneratec', 0, 'Rapist', rand(18,40)
 				$boy[0] = $npclastgenerated
@@ -382,11 +351,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vor2':
 				$boy[1] = $npclastgenerated
 				$boydesc[1] = $npc_usedname[$npclastgenerated]
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sex/g2.jpg"></center>'
-				'You stand up and bend over, one of them stands behind you and stuffs his dick into your pussy. "Yes, it''s dripping wet, this bitch was just waiting for some cock." He says.'
-				'"Open your mouth." Growls the second guy inserting his dick into your mouth. They proceeded to rape you from both sides, you are overwhelmed with desire while being spit-roasted with your hands tied behind your back by two strangers.'
-				'You diligently fuck the one while sucking the others dick, when suddenly your eyes glaze, your body pleasantly shivers and you shake in orgasm. The one fucking your mouth pulls out. "What''s wrong with this bitch, is she epileptic?" He cries.'
-				'"You idiot, I told her to please us, and this bitch came." Says the second. They untie your hands and get off you. "Let''s see what she can do with her hands free." says one of them.'
-
+				'You stand up and bend over as one of them stands behind you and stuffs his dick into your pussy.'
+				'"Open your mouth!" the second guy growls and he inserts his dick into your mouth. They proceed to rape you from both sides before they untie your hands and get off you. "Let''s see what she can do with her hands free," one of them says.'
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 				gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'rough', 'sub', 'group', 'bound'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 15, 'rough', 'sub', 'group', 'bound'
@@ -397,16 +363,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vor2':
 			end
 		end
 	elseif pcs_apprnc < 120:
-		'"Do as I tell you." Replies the first. "And gag her." He adds. The second one doesn''t argue and takes some of your clothes and stuffs them in your mouth. "If you try to leave in the next half an hour you''re dead." Says the first intruder, and they leave.'
-		'You don''t wait half an hour before you start trying to break free, fortunately they really didn''t know how to tie a knot and soon you''re free.'
+		'"Gag her," one of them orders and the second one doesn''t argue as he takes some of your clothes and stuffs them in your mouth. "If you try to leave in the next half hour, you''re dead," he says and they leave.'
+		'You don''t wait half an hour before you start trying to break free. Fortunately, they really didn''t know how to tie a knot and you''re soon free.'
 
-		act 'Assess the damage':gt 'bed', 'vorend'
+		act 'Assess the damage': gt 'bed', 'vorend'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'vorend':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	menu_off = 1
 	if remsitr = 0:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sitr.jpg"></center>'
 	if remsitr = 1:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sitr2.jpg"></center>'
@@ -429,7 +394,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vorend':
 	end
 
 	gs 'stat'
-	act 'Finish':gt 'sitr'
+	act 'Finish': gt 'sitr'
 end
 
 --- bed ---------------------------------

locations/bedr.qsrc

@@ -7,14 +7,10 @@ gs 'shortgs', 'setloc', 'bedr', $ARGS[0]
 $locclass = 'bedr'
 $location_type = 'private'
 gs 'themes', 'indoors'
-
 gs 'stat'
 
-
 if pcs_magik >= 6 and spellbefshild = 1 and tobiQW = 0:gt 'tobiQW', 'start'
-
 '<center><b><font color="maroon">Bedroom</font></b></center>'
-
 if rembedr = 0:
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/bedr.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
@@ -23,55 +19,55 @@ if rembedr = 0:
 	
 	'Your <a href="exec:gt ''budilnik'', ''start''">alarm clock</a> is set to <b>'+iif(timer < 10,'0<<timer>>','<<timer>>')+':'+iif(timerM < 10,'0<<timerM>>','<<timerM>>')+'</b> during the week and <b>'+iif(timerEnd < 10,'0<<timerEnd>>','<<timerEnd>>')+':'+iif(timerEndM < 10,'0<<timerEndM>>','<<timerEndM>>')+'</b> during the weekend. It is currently turned '+iif(budilnikOn = 0, '<a href="exec: budilnikOn = 1 & gt $loc">OFF</a>.', '<a href="exec: budilnikOn = 0 & gt $loc">ON</a>.')
 	*nl
-	'An old wooden <a href="exec:gt ''wardrobe'', ''start''">wardrobe</a> stands near the door to the corridor.The windows are closed with faded, heavy curtains.'
+	'An old wooden <a href="exec:gt ''wardrobe'', ''start''">wardrobe</a> stands near the door to the corridor. The windows are closed with faded, heavy curtains.'
 else
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/bedr2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'A bright and beautiful room, with a large, kingsized <a href="exec:gt ''bed'', ''start''">double bed</a>.'
 	*nl
 	if budilnikOn = 0:
-		'There is an  <a href="exec:gt ''budilnik'', ''start''">alarm clock</a> on the bedside table, and it is set to '+iif(timer < 10,'0<<timer>>','<<timer>>')+':'+iif(timerM < 10,'0<<timerM>>','<<timerM>>')+' and is currently turned <a href="exec: budilnikOn = 1 & gt ''<<$loc>>''">off</a>.'
+		'There is an <a href="exec:gt ''budilnik'', ''start''">alarm clock</a> on the bedside table, and it is set to '+iif(timer < 10,'0<<timer>>','<<timer>>')+':'+iif(timerM < 10,'0<<timerM>>','<<timerM>>')+' and is currently turned <a href="exec: budilnikOn = 1 & gt ''<<$loc>>''">off</a>.'
 	else
 		'There is an <a href="exec:gt ''budilnik'', ''start''">alarm clock</a> on the bedside table, and it is set to '+iif(timer < 10,'0<<timer>>','<<timer>>')+':'+iif(timerM < 10,'0<<timerM>>','<<timerM>>')+' and is currently turned <a href="exec: budilnikOn = 0 & gt ''<<$loc>>''">on</a>.'
 	end
 	*nl
-	'A modern <a href="exec:gt ''wardrobe'', ''start''">wardrobe</a> (where you can choose outfits and organize your clothing) stands near the door to the corridor. Against the wall, stands a make-up table with a <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a> on it.'
+	'A modern <a href="exec:gt ''wardrobe'', ''start''">wardrobe</a> stands near the door to the corridor. Against the wall stands a make-up table with a <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a> on it.'
 end
 if $ml_guitar['location'] = $loc: 'Your guitar rests on its stand next to your bed.'
 *nl
-act 'The corridor':gt 'korr'
+act 'Go to the corridor': gt 'korr'
 
 if husbandrinkday = daystart:
-	if husbanstrapon = 1:'Your drunken husband sleeps on the bed, with a butt plug up his ass.'
-	if husbanstrapon = 2:'Your drunken husband sleeps on the bed, after you''ve put a dildo up his ass.'
-	if husbanstrapon = 3:'Your drunken husband sleeps on the bed, after you''ve fucked him with a strapon.'
+	if husbanstrapon = 1:'Your drunken husband sleeps on the bed with a butt plug up his ass.'
+	if husbanstrapon = 2:'Your drunken husband sleeps on the bed after you put a dildo up his ass.'
+	if husbanstrapon = 3:'Your drunken husband sleeps on the bed after you fucked him with a strap-on.'
 	gs 'music_actions', 'no_music'
 end
 if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
-	if hour > 22 or hour < 7:'<a href="exec:gt ''husb'', ''start''">Husband is sleeping on the bed.</a>'
+	if hour > 22 or hour < 7:'Your <a href="exec:gt ''husb'', ''start''">husband</a> is sleeping on the bed.'
 	gs 'music_actions', 'no_music'
 end
 
 if husbandrink = 11 and husbanstrapon > 0 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 	cla
-	'Your husband approaches you and asks, "Honey, my ass hurts, like a lot, do you know why?"'
+	'Your husband approaches you. "Honey, my ass hurts. Like a lot. Do you know why?"'
 
 	act 'Lie':
 		cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		husbanstrapon = 0
-		'"No dear, I do''nt know anything", you answer, trying to look as innocent as possible. He shruggs and walks away'
+		'"No dear, I don''t know anything about that," you answer, trying to look as innocent as possible before he shrugs and walks away.'
 
-		act 'Finish':gt 'bedr'
+		act 'Finish': gt 'bedr'
 	end
 
 	act 'Confess':
 		cla
 		menu_off = 1
 
-		if husbanstrapon = 1:'"Honey, you were so drunk last night, that I decided to teach you a lesson and put an anal plug up your ass. I''ll never do it again, forgive me please", you say.'
-		if husbanstrapon = 2:'"Dear, I wanted to make you happy, so I started to give you a blowjob, but you didn''t cum, so I inserted a finger into your asshole, but you still didn''t cum, then I took a small dildo and some lube and put in your ass, I''ve never seen you cum like that before. I even gave you a secong blowjob. Forgive me, but you seemed to enjoy it so much, that I could''t stop. I just wanted to make you happy.", you lie to him.'
-		if husbanstrapon = 3:'"Dear, I wanted to make you a happy, so I started to give you a blowjob, but you didn''t cum, so I inserted a finger into your asshole, but you still didn''t cum. When I put in a second finger you began to move your ass towards my fingers moaning heavily, I thought that you like it, so I put on a strapon. You enjoyed it so much that you finished over and over again, and I continued until I was tired. I then licked all the cum off your body and went to sleep. I just wanted to make you happy and you were enjoying it. Forgive me please", you lie him.'
+		if husbanstrapon = 1:'"Honey, you were so drunk last night that I decided to teach you a lesson and put a butt plug up your ass."'
+		if husbanstrapon = 2:'"I wanted to make you happy, so I started to give you a blowjob, but you didn''t cum, so I inserted a finger into your asshole. When you still didn''t cum, I took a small dildo and some lube and put in it your ass; I''ve never seen you cum like that before. I even gave you a secong blowjob. Forgive me, but you seemed to enjoy it so much that I could''t stop. I just wanted to make you happy," you lie to him.'
+		if husbanstrapon = 3:'"I wanted to make you happy, so I started to give you a blowjob, but you didn''t cum, so I inserted a finger into your asshole. When you still didn''t cum, I put in a second finger you began to move your ass towards my fingers, moaning heavily. I thought that you liked it, so I put on a strap-on. You enjoyed it so much that you finished over and over again, and I continued until I was tired. I then licked all the cum off your body and went to sleep. I just wanted to make you happy and you were enjoying it," you lie him.'
 
 		if harakHusb = 2:
 			husbizvradd = 0
@@ -81,18 +77,18 @@ if husbandrink = 11 and husbanstrapon > 0 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 			divorced += 1
 			fingal += 1
 			minut += 120
-			'The next thing you feel is a powerful punch in the face. When you come back to your senses, you realize that your husband and his things are gone. He left a note, telling you he is going to file for divorce.'
+			'The next thing you feel is a powerful slap to the face. When you come back to your senses, your husband and his things are gone. He left a note telling you he''s going to file for divorce.'
 		elseif harakHusb = 1:
 			if husbanstrapon = 1:
-				'"Look, do not do it again!", he says and storms off angry.'
+				'"Don''t do that again!" he snarls and storms off.'
 			elseif husbanstrapon = 2:
 				husbizvradd += 1
-				'"Do not do it again, I''m still a man and I''m not supposed to get fucked in my ass!", he says and storms off angry.'
+				'"Don''t do that again! I''m a man and I''m not supposed to get fucked in the ass!" he snarls and storms off.'
 
 			elseif husbanstrapon = 3:
 				if pcs_intel > 40 or izvratH = 1:
 					husbharmin += 1
-					'"Are you serious, I''m not some kind of bitch, that wants to get fucked up the arse!" he yells at you. You start to cry and say that you only wanted to please him, he looks at you and says, sighting, "Don''t cry sweetie, I believe you, but do not do it again."'
+					'"Are you serious?! I''m not some kind of bitch that wants to get fucked up the ass!" he yells at you. You start to cry and say that you only wanted to please him and he looks at you and sighs. "Don''t cry, sweetie. I believe you, just don''t do it again."'
 				elseif pcs_intel <= 40:
 					husbizvradd = 0
 					husbharmin = 0
@@ -101,19 +97,19 @@ if husbandrink = 11 and husbanstrapon > 0 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 					divorced += 1
 					fingal += 1
 					minut += 120
-			'The next thing you feel is a powerful punch in the face. When you come back to your senses, you realize that your husband and his things are gone. He left a note, telling you he is going to file for divorce.'
+					'The next thing you feel is a powerful slap to the face. When you come back to your senses, your husband and his things are gone. He left a note telling you he''s going to file for divorce.'
 				end
 			end
 		elseif harakHusb = 0:
 			if husbanstrapon = 1:
-				'"I''m sorry I will not get that drunk again, " he says and leaves the room.'
+				'"I''m sorry. I won''t get that drunk again," he says and leaves the room.'
 			elseif husbanstrapon = 2:
 				husbizvradd += 1
-				'"You''re so thoughtful, instead of scolding me, you still wanted to make me happy, thank you dear." he says and leaves the room.'
+				'"You''re so thoughtful. Instead of scolding me, you still wanted to make me happy. Thank you, dear," he says and leaves the room.'
 			elseif husbanstrapon = 3:
 				husbizvradd += 1
-				'"Did I really like it?" he asks. You nod.'
-				'"Well then, thank you dear, but the next time you should ask me first!" he says and leaves the room.'
+				'"Did I really like it?" he asks and you nod.'
+				'"Well then, thank you dear. Ask me next time though," he says and leaves the room.'
 			end
 		end
 
@@ -123,35 +119,31 @@ end
 
 if husbandrink = 10 and hour > 20 and hour < 23 and husbanstrapon = 0:
 	'<<$husName>> came home drunk and fell asleep on the bed.'
-	'<i>That pig!</i>, you think, but an idea springs to your mind, <i>Maybe I should teach him a lesson, so he won''t get drunk again</i>'
+	'<i>That pig</i>! you think when an idea springs to mind. <i>Maybe I should teach him a lesson so he won''t get drunk again</i>.'
 
 	if analplug = 1:
 		act 'Insert a butt plug in his ass':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			menu_off = 1
 			husbandrinkday = daystart
 			husbandrink = 11
 			husbanstrapon = 1
 			minut += 10
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/h0.jpg"></center>'
+			if analplugin = 1: 'You pull the plug out of you and shove it up his ass.'
+			if analplugin = 0: 'You take an anal plug and put it into his ass.'
 
-			if analplugin = 1:'You pull the plug out of your own anus and shove it up his ass.'
-			if analplugin = 0:'You go take an anal plug and put it into his ass.'
-
-			'<<$husName>> moved, but he doesn''t wake up'
+			'<<$husName>> moves, but he doesn''t wake up.'
 
 			if dildo > 0:
 				act 'Insert a dildo into his ass':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					husbanstrapon = 2
 					gs 'boyStat', $HusID
 					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', $boy, 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/h1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You pull out the plug and replace with it with a dildo, <<$husName>> did not even budge. You slowly move the dildo in and out, trying not to wake him up. You notice his cock starts to get rock hard, and <<$husName>> starts to moan softly, but is still asleep. With the dildo in his ass, his dick starts to throb, it seems like he is going to cum. You take his dick in your mouth and you don''t need to suck on it for long. He starts to cum, you swallow it and completely clean his cock. You carefully put back on his underpants.'
-
+					'You pull out the plug and replace with it with a dildo. <<$husName>> doesn''t even budge as you slowly move the dildo in and out, trying not to wake him up. You notice his cock starts to get rock hard, and he starts to moan softly in his sleep. His dick starts to throb, like he''s going to cum. You take his dick in your mouth and don''t need to suck on it for long. You swallow his cum before carefully putting his underpants back on.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 20
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo_give', 20
 					minut -= 20
@@ -163,9 +155,8 @@ if husbandrink = 10 and hour > 20 and hour < 23 and husbanstrapon = 0:
 			end
 
 			if strapon > 0:
-				act 'Use the strapon':
-					cla
-					*clr
+				act 'Use the strap-on':
+					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					minut += 20
 					husbanstrapon = 3
@@ -173,8 +164,7 @@ if husbandrink = 10 and hour > 20 and hour < 23 and husbanstrapon = 0:
 					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', $boy, 1
 					pcs_horny += 30
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/h2.jpg"></center>'
-					'You put on the strapon and pull out the butt plug. You gently move the shaft of the strapon inside his ass, <<$husName>>  moves but doesn''t wake up. You continue to slowly move it in and out, trying not to wake him. You notice his cock is getting rock hard and <<$husName>> starts to moan softly, still not waking up. Hopeing that he won''t wake up, you increase your speed and push the entire length of the strapon into his has. You see his hard dick and you start to stroke it in addition to pounding him like a little bitch. Realizing he is not far from cumming, you pull out and finish him by giving him a blowjob. He cums inside it, you swallow it down and clean his cock. You carefully put back on his underpants.'
-
+					'You put on the strapon and pull out the butt plug. You gently move the shaft of the strap-on inside his ass and <<$husName>> moves, but doesn''t wake up. You continue to slowly move it in and out, trying not to wake him. You notice his cock is getting rock hard and he starts to moan softly in his sleep. Hoping that he won''t wake up, you increase your speed and push the entire length of the strap-on into his ass as you start to stroke his dick. Realizing he''s not far from cumming, you pull out and finish him by giving him a blowjob. He cums in your mouth and you swallow before carefully putting his underpants back on.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 20
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 20
 					minut -= 20
@@ -191,30 +181,27 @@ if husbandrink = 10 and hour > 20 and hour < 23 and husbanstrapon = 0:
 end
 
 if sick >= 1:
-	act 'Go to sleep (You''re sick)':
-		cla
-		*clr
+	act 'Go to sleep (Sick)':
+		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		minut += 240
 		pcs_sleep += 40
 		sick -= 1
-
 		if sick < 0:sick = 0
-
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick<<rand(11, 17)>>.jpg"></center>'
-		'You are lying in bed, coughing, sneezing and blowing your nose'
+		'You''re lying in bed coughing, sneezing and blowing your nose.'
 
-		act 'Measure temperature':gt 'bedr'
+		act 'Check your temperature': gt 'bedr'
 	end
 end
 
 dynamic $palelady
 
-if pcs_horny >= 50: act 'Masturbate':gt 'selfplay', 'start'
+if pcs_horny >= 50: act 'Masturbate': gt 'selfplay', 'start'
 
 if pornMagazine > 0:
-	'Under your mattress you hide a porn magazine.'
+	'You hide a porn magazine under your mattress.'
 	gs 'events', 'read_porn'
 end
 gs 'subkid'
@@ -223,5 +210,6 @@ act 'Relax on your bed': gt 'bed', 'start'
 act 'Open wardrobe': gt 'wardrobe', 'start'
 gs 'prostitution_functions', 'prostitute_outfit_at_home'
 gs 'music_actions', 'music_icon'
+
 --- bedr ---------------------------------
 

locations/bedr2x.qsrc

@@ -11,7 +11,6 @@ $menu_arg = ''
 menu_off = 0
 $locclass = 'bedr'
 $location_type = 'private'
-
 minut += 1
 elektro += 1
 gs 'stat'
@@ -23,7 +22,7 @@ if pcs_magik >= 6 and spellbefshild = 1 and tobiQW = 0:gt'tobiQW','start'
 'A bright and beautiful bedroom, with modern and stylish furniture.'
 *nl
 'The room is dominated by <a href="exec:gt ''bed'',''start''">full sized bed</a>'
-	'Your <a href="exec:gt ''budilnik'', ''start''">alarm clock</a> is set to <b>'+iif(timer < 10,'0<<timer>>','<<timer>>')+':'+iif(timerM < 10,'0<<timerM>>','<<timerM>>')+'</b> during the week and <b>'+iif(timerEnd < 10,'0<<timerEnd>>','<<timerEnd>>')+':'+iif(timerEndM < 10,'0<<timerEndM>>','<<timerEndM>>')+'</b> during the weekend. It is currently turned '+iif(budilnikOn = 0, '<a href="exec: budilnikOn = 1 & gt $loc">OFF</a>.', '<a href="exec: budilnikOn = 0 & gt $loc">ON</a>.')
+'Your <a href="exec:gt ''budilnik'', ''start''">alarm clock</a> is set to <b>'+iif(timer < 10,'0<<timer>>','<<timer>>')+':'+iif(timerM < 10,'0<<timerM>>','<<timerM>>')+'</b> during the week and <b>'+iif(timerEnd < 10,'0<<timerEnd>>','<<timerEnd>>')+':'+iif(timerEndM < 10,'0<<timerEndM>>','<<timerEndM>>')+'</b> during the weekend. It is currently turned '+iif(budilnikOn = 0, '<a href="exec: budilnikOn = 1 & gt $loc">OFF</a>.', '<a href="exec: budilnikOn = 0 & gt $loc">ON</a>.')
 *nl
 'Near the entrance stands a modern <a href="exec:gt ''wardrobe'', ''start''">wardrobe</a>.'
 *nl
@@ -32,35 +31,35 @@ if pcs_magik >= 6 and spellbefshild = 1 and tobiQW = 0:gt'tobiQW','start'
 if $ml_guitar['location'] = $loc: 'Your guitar rests on its stand next to your bed.'
 *nl
 if husbandrinkday = daystart:
-	if husbanstrapon = 1:'Your husband is still passed out drunk, after you used an anal plug on him.'
-	if husbanstrapon = 2:'Your husband is still passed out drunk, after you stuck a dildo in his ass.'
-	if husbanstrapon = 3:'Your husband is still passed out drunk, after you fucked him in the ass with a strap-on.'
+	if husbanstrapon = 1:'Your husband is still passed out drunk after you used an anal plug on him.'
+	if husbanstrapon = 2:'Your husband is still passed out drunk after you stuck a dildo in his ass.'
+	if husbanstrapon = 3:'Your husband is still passed out drunk after you fucked him in the ass with a strap-on.'
 	gs 'music_actions', 'no_music'
 end
-act 'In the corridor':gt'korr2x'
+act 'Go to the corridor': gt 'korr2x'
 
 if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 	if hour > 22 or hour < 7:
-		'<a href="exec: gt''husb'',''start'' ">On the bed your husband is sleeping.</a>'
+		'Your <a href="exec: gt''husb'',''start'' ">husband</a> is sleeping on the bed.'
 		gs 'music_actions', 'no_music'
 	end
 end
 if husbandrink = 11 and husbanstrapon > 0 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 	cla
-	'Your husband approaches you and asks, "Dear my ass hurts, did something happen yesterday?"'
-	act 'Lied':
+	'Your husband approaches you. "Honey, my ass hurts. Did something happen yesterday?"'
+	act 'Lie':
 		cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		husbanstrapon = 0
-		'"No dear, not that I know of, though you were in the bathroom a lot." You say with an innocent look on your face. Your husband shrugged his shoulders and walked away'
-		act 'Finish':gt'bedr2x'
+		'"Not that I know of, though you were in the bathroom a lot," you say with an innocent look on your face before he shrugs his shoulders and walks away.'
+		act 'Finish': gt 'bedr2x'
 	end
 	act 'Confess':
 		cla
 		menu_off = 1
-		if husbanstrapon = 1:'"Dear yesterday you got so drunk, I decided to teach a lesson to you and you put a plug in your ass. But I''ll never do it again, please forgive me." you say.'
-		if husbanstrapon = 2:'"Dear, I wanted to give you a pleasant surprise and started to give you a blowjob, but you wouldn''t cum no matter how much I tried. So I put a finger in your ass, but again you failed to cum. Then I put the dildo in your ass and you shoot your load, I even gave you another blowjob, forgive me, but you were so good that I could not stop, I just wanted to get you off." Is what you tell him.'
-		if husbanstrapon = 3:'"Dear, I wanted to give you a pleasant surprise and started to give you a blowjob, but you wouldn''t cum no matter how much I tried. So I put a finger in your ass, but again you failed to cum. Then I put in a second finger in your ass, but you started moving your ass up and down, fucking my fingers as you moaned in pleasure, muttering yes more. Since you seemed to be liking it so much and asked for more. I put on my strap-on and I fucked you with it, while I was jerking you off. You came several times, shooting several thick heavy loads all over. I kept doing it until I got to tired to fuck you anymore, then I stopped and licked all your sperm up and went to sleep next to you. I just wanted you to be happy, even if you don''t remember. Please forgive me?" Is what you tell him.'
+		if husbanstrapon = 1:'"You got so drunk yesterday that I decided to teach you a lesson and put a plug in your ass."'
+		if husbanstrapon = 2:'"I wanted to give you a pleasant surprise and started to give you a blowjob, but you wouldn''t cum no matter how much I tried, so I put a finger in your ass, but again you failed to cum. That''s when I put the dildo in your ass and you shot your load. Forgive me, but I just wanted to get you off."'
+		if husbanstrapon = 3:'"I wanted to give you a pleasant surprise and started to give you a blowjob, but you wouldn''t cum no matter how much I tried, so I put a finger in your ass, but again you failed to cum. That''s when I put in a second finger and you started moving your ass up and down, fucking my fingers as you moaned in pleasure. Since you seemed to be liking it so much and asked for more, I put on my strap-on and fucked you with it while I was jerking you off. I just wanted you to be happy, even if you don''t remember. Please forgive me!"'
 		if harakHusb = 2:
 			husbizvradd = 0
 			husbharmin = 0
@@ -70,18 +69,17 @@ if husbandrink = 11 and husbanstrapon > 0 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 			fingal += 1
 			minut += 120
 
-			'The next thing you feel is a powerful slap to the face. Without saying another word to you, he packed his things quickly and left. Later that same day he filed for a divorce.'
+			'The next thing you feel is a powerful slap to the face. When you come back to your senses, your husband and his things are gone. He left a note telling you he''s going to file for divorce.'
 		elseif harakHusb = 1:
 			if husbanstrapon = 1:
-				'"Look, just don''t do that anymore." he said and left.'
+				'"Just don''t do that anymore," is all he says before leaving the room.'
 			elseif husbanstrapon = 2:
 				husbizvradd += 1
-				'"Well, my balls feel empty, but don''t ever do that again, I''m still a man and I don''t get fucked in the ass, I do the fucking." he said and left.'
+				'"Don''t ever do that again. I''m a man and <i>I</i> do the fucking!" he says before leaving the room.'
 			elseif husbanstrapon = 3:
 				if pcs_intel > 40 or izvratH = 1:
 					husbharmin += 1
-
-					'"Are you really trying to tell me, that I asked you to fuck me with a strap-on bitch?" he bellowed, when you started crying, with tears running down your face and began to lament that only wanted to please him, he looked at you and said, exhaled. "Fine, fine, I believe you. I believe you wanted to pleasure me and make me happy, but never do that again."'
+					'"Are you really trying to tell me that I asked you to fuck me with a strap-on, bitch?" he bellows. When you start crying and lamenting that you only wanted to please him, he looks at you and exhales. "Fine, fine, I believe you. I believe you wanted to pleasure me and make me happy, but never do that again."'
 				elseif pcs_intel <= 40:
 					husbizvradd = 0
 					husbharmin = 0
@@ -91,116 +89,108 @@ if husbandrink = 11 and husbanstrapon > 0 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 					fingal += 1
 					minut += 120
 
-					'The next thing you feel is a powerful slap to the face. Without saying another word to you, he packed his things quickly and left. Later that same day he filed for a divorce.'
+					'The next thing you feel is a powerful slap to the face. When you come back to your senses, your husband and his things are gone. He left a note telling you he''s going to file for divorce.'
 				end
 			end
 		elseif harakHusb = 0:
 			if husbanstrapon = 1:
-				'"I''m sorry I will not get so drunk again." he said and left.'
+				'"I''m sorry. I won''t get that drunk again," he says before leaving the room.'
 			elseif husbanstrapon = 2:
 				husbizvradd += 1
-				'"You''re such a caring woman, instead of scolding me for being drunk. You suck me off instead, thank you dear." he said and left.'
+				'"You''re such a caring woman. Instead of scolding me for being drunk, you suck me off. Thank you, dear," he says before leaving the room.'
 			elseif husbanstrapon = 3:
 				husbizvradd += 1
-				'"I really liked it?" he asked, you nodded affirmatively, "Well then, thank you dear, but next time ask for my consent." he said and left'
+				'"I really liked it?" he asks and you nod. "Well then, thank you dear, but ask for my consent next time," he says before leaving the room.'
 			end
 		end
 
-		act 'Finish':husbanstrapon = 0 & gt'bedr2x'
+		act 'Finish':husbanstrapon = 0 & gt 'bedr2x'
 	end
 end
 
 if husbandrink = 10 and hour > 20 and hour < 23 and husbanstrapon = 0:
 	'<<$husName>> came home very drunk and collapsed on the bed. He fell asleep in his clothes.'
-	'"That pig!" You swore, and then started thinking of ways to teach him a lesson.'
+	'<i>That pig</i>! you think when an idea springs to mind. <i>Maybe I should teach him a lesson so he won''t get drunk again</i>.'
 
 	if analplug = 1:
 		act 'Insert an anal plug':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			menu_off = 1
 			husbandrinkday = daystart
 			husbandrink = 11
 			husbanstrapon = 1
 			minut += 10
-
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/h0.jpg"></center>'
-			if analplugin = 1:'You get out your butt plug and pull down his pants. You put just a dab of lube on the tip of the plug, then gently insert it in his ass.'
-			if analplugin = 0:'You go get a small skinny candle, you come back and pull down his pants and slip the candle in his ass.'
-			'<<$husName>> moved, but did not wake up.'
+			if analplugin = 1: 'You get your butt plug out and pull down his pants. You put just a dab of lube on the tip of the plug, then gently insert it into his ass.'
+			if analplugin = 0: 'You take an anal plug and put it into his ass.'
+			'<<$husName>> moves, but he doesn''t wake up.'
 
 			if dildo > 0:
 				act 'Insert dildo':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					husbanstrapon = 2
 					gs 'boyStat', $HusID
 					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', $boy
-
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/h1.jpg"></center>'
 					'You pull out the plug and stick the dildo up his ass instead, <<$husName>> did not move. You began to slowly move the dildo trying not to wake him. After a bit his dick begins to get hard in front of your face, and <<$husName>> moaned softly, but didn''t wake up. You start to really work the dildo in his ass, stroking it deep in his ass, before too long his cock started to throb. You wrap your lips around his cock, you barely even started to suck his dick when suddenly your mouth is filled with a jet of sperm, you swallow it all and carefully cleaned his penis, then you pulled his pants back up.'
-
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 20
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo_give', 20
 					minut -= 20
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 
-					act 'Finish':gt'bedr2x'
+					act 'Finish': gt 'bedr2x'
 				end
 			end
 
 			if strapon > 0:
 				act 'Wear strap-on':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
+					minut += 20
 					husbanstrapon = 3
-					gs 'boyStat', $husID
-					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', $boy
-
+					gs 'boyStat', $HusID
+					gs 'cum_call', 'mouth_swallow', $boy, 1
+					pcs_horny += 30
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/h2.jpg"></center>'
-					'You get out your strap-on and wear it. Once it''s firmly in place, you lube it up before you position yourself so the strap-on, is against his anus, <<$husName>> stirred, but did not wake up. You slowly push the strap-on into his ass slowly as to not wake him up. He moans as you do, you slowly slip it balls deep in him and then proceed to fuck him, his cock gets hard as you do. Realizing that in this state, he will not wake up, you start to really fuck him hard, dring it the entire length of the strap-on balls deep in his ass. As his cock started quivering you took a hold of it and began jerking him off as you fucked him with your strap-on. You are really starting to get into it when he moans loudly and starts shooting cum all over his own stomach. Once he stops spurting sperm you stop fucking him and pull the strap-on out of his ass, you lick the cum up off his stomach. Once finished you clean everything up and pull his pants back up.'
-
+					'You put on the strapon and pull out the butt plug. You gently move the shaft of the strap-on inside his ass and <<$husName>> moves, but doesn''t wake up. You continue to slowly move it in and out, trying not to wake him. You notice his cock is getting rock hard and he starts to moan softly in his sleep. Hoping that he won''t wake up, you increase your speed and push the entire length of the strap-on into his ass as you start to stroke his dick. Realizing he''s not far from cumming, you pull out and finish him by giving him a blowjob. He cums in your mouth and you swallow before carefully putting his underpants back on.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 20
-					gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo_give', 20
+					gs 'arousal', 'anal_strap_give', 20
 					minut -= 20
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
 
-					act 'Finish':gt'bedr2x'
+					act 'Finish': gt 'bedr2x'
 				end
 			end
 
-			act 'Finish':gt'bedr2x'
+			act 'Finish': gt 'bedr2x'
 		end
 	end
 end
 
 if sick >= 1:
-	act 'Go to bed rest (disease)':
-		cla
-		*clr
+	act 'Go to bed rest (Sick)':
+		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		minut += 240
 		sick = sick - 1
 		if sick < 0:sick = 0
 		gs'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick<<rand(11,17)>>.jpg"></center>'
+		'You lie in bed, coughing, sneezing and blowing your nose.'
 
-		'You lie in bed, coughing, sneezing and blowing your nose'
-
-		act 'Pomeroy temperature':gt'bedr2x'
+		act 'Check your temperature': gt 'bedr2x'
 	end
 end
 
 dynamic $palelady
 
-if pcs_horny >= 50: act 'Masturbate': gt'selfplay', 'start'
+if pcs_horny >= 50: act 'Masturbate': gt 'selfplay', 'start'
 
 if pornMagazine > 0:
-	'Under the mattress you have hidden a porn magazine.'
+	'You have hidden a porn magazine under your mattress.'
 	gs 'events', 'read_porn'
 end
 

locations/bedrPar.qsrc

@@ -26,7 +26,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		elseif analplug = 1 and analplugin = 0 and motherQW['seen_plug'] ! 1 and rand(1,3) = 1:
 			gt 'mother', 'plug_find'
 		else
-			'You walk into your bedroom and find your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> sweeping and dusting the room, folding clothes and putting them away and making the beds.'
+			'You walk into your bedroom and find your mother sweeping and dusting the room, folding clothes and putting them away and making the beds.'
 			act 'Access wardrobe':
 				$loc = 'korrPar'
 				$loc_arg = ''
@@ -37,8 +37,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	elseif ParrotQW['Level'] = 2 and $home['current'] = 'parents_home':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
-		'As soon as you enter the room you rush over to <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage and pour the contents of the vial into his water bowl.'
-		'You hope this will work and keep him from spilling you and your sister''s bedroom secrets.'
+		'As soon as you enter the room, you rush over to <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage and pour the contents of the vial into his water bowl. You hope this will work and keep him from spilling you and your sister''s bedroom secrets.'
 		ParrotQW['Level'] = 3
 		ParrotQW['Day'] = 3
 		
@@ -46,7 +45,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	elseif ParrotQW['SisterReleaseParrotDay'] + 3 < daystart and ParrotQW['Level'] = 1 and $home['current'] = 'parents_home':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
-		'When you enter the room, you notice <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage is open and he is gone.'
+		'When you enter the room, you notice <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage is open and he''s gone.'
 		'Anya must have released him since you weren''t able to find a solution in time.'
 		ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 0
 		ParrotQW['Level'] = 0
@@ -73,7 +72,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		end
 		if npc_rel['A33']  <= 50:
 			'"No he isn''t cute, and I suggest you get it out of here. I''m not sharing my room with a bird!"'
-			'You are somewhat upset, but you understand. You should have asked her before buying it.'
+			'You''re somewhat upset, but you understand. You should have asked her before buying it.'
 			'You go to the window, open it and release the bird.'
 			ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 0
 		end
@@ -176,7 +175,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					sisterdialog = 3
 					'<a href="exec:gt ''sister_chat'', ''sister_chat''">Anya</a> is getting ready to go out.'
 				elseif locat['Anya'] = 15:
-					if anyaQW['bathroom_dildos'] > 0:gt'sister_chat','bathroom_dildo_talk1'
+					if anyaQW['bathroom_dildos'] > 0: gt 'sister_chat','bathroom_dildo_talk1'
 					'<a href="exec:gt ''sister_chat'', ''sister_chat''">Anya</a> is sitting on her bed, reading a book.'
 				elseif locat['Anya'] = 26:
 					if sisboypartyQW = 1: sisboypartyQW = 2
@@ -193,9 +192,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 		if $home['current'] = 'parents_home':
 			act 'Relax on your bed': gt 'bed', 'start'
-
 			act 'Open wardrobe': gt 'wardrobe', 'start'
-			
 			gs 'prostitution_functions', 'prostitute_outfit_at_home'
 			
 			if pornMagazine > 0:'You have hidden your porn magazines under the mattress of your bed.'
@@ -220,9 +217,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			if tovarL > 0:'You currently have <<tovarL>> trinkets to sell at the station. The maximum you can carry is 30.'
 
 			if locat['Anya_inroom'] = 0: dynamic $palelady
-
+			
 			gs 'wardrobe', 'default_sport_options'
-
+			
 			gs 'exercise', 'start'
 
 			if sewing_kit = 1:
@@ -243,17 +240,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 								tkan -= 1
 								newgobelen = 1
 								minut += 15
-								gs'stat'
+								gs 'stat'
 								'You spend 15 minutes at the embroidery frame, preparing the fabric and outlining the pattern for the tapestry.'
 
-								act'Set the tapestry aside':gt 'bedrPar', 'start'
+								act 'Set the tapestry aside': gt 'bedrPar', 'start'
 							end
 						end
 					end
 				end	
 				if newgobelen>=1:
 					'Your tapestry is <<newgobelen/10>> percent finished.'
-					act'Work on the tapestry':
+					act 'Work on the tapestry':
 						*clr & cla
 						menu_off = 1
 						minut+=60
@@ -261,14 +258,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						gobramax = (pcs_sewng - 70) * 6
 						gobramin = (pcs_sewng - 70) * 2
 						newgobelen += rand(gobramin,gobramax)
-						gs'stat'
+						gs 'stat'
 						if newgobelen < 1000:'You spend an hour working on your tapestry, which is now <<newgobelen/10>> percent finished.'
 							if newgobelen >= 1000:
 							newgobelen = 0
 							gobelen += 1
 							'Your work on the tapestry is done.'
 						end
-						act'Set the tapestry aside':gt 'bedrPar', 'start'
+						act 'Set the tapestry aside': gt 'bedrPar', 'start'
 					end
 				end
 				if gobelen > 0: 'You have <<gobelen>> completed tapestries.'
@@ -281,8 +278,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 				if sisboytrio = 0: access['noporn'] = 1
 				access['nocamshow'] = 1
-				$access['noporn'] = 'You shouldn''t watch porn with your sister in the room, she would notice for sure!'
-				$access['nocamshow'] ='You can''t do any webcam activities with your sister in the room!'
+				$access['noporn'] = 'You shouldn''t watch porn with your sister in the room. She would notice for sure!'
+				$access['nocamshow'] = 'You can''t do any webcam activities with your sister in the room!'
 			else
 				gs 'music_actions', 'clear_restrictions'
 			end
@@ -316,8 +313,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 	music_loop = 0
 	'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost4.jpg"></center>'
-	*nl
-	'All of a sudden, you hear a familiar voice yell out. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, time to get up! You can''t spend the whole day laying around!"'
+	'You sudenly hear a familiar voice yelling out. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, time to get up! You can''t spend the whole day laying around!"'
 	wait 1000
 	$temp_nickname = input('<center>What name do you address your mother by?<br>Mother (default), Mum, Mom, Mama, etc.</center>')
 	if $temp_nickname ! '':$npc_nickname['A29'] = '<<$temp_nickname>>'
@@ -328,17 +324,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
-		'You tiredly open your eyes and see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> standing over you. "Fifteen more minutes..." you mumble.'
-		'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> lets out a loud sigh. "No, up now!" she says as she yanks the covers off.'
+		'You tiredly open your eyes and see your mother standing over you. "Fifteen more minutes..." you mumble.'
+		'Your mother lets out a loud sigh. "No, up now!" she says as she yanks the covers off.'
 		'"<<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>!" you exclaim as you feel a slightly cold breeze hit your body.'
-		'"No excuses <<$pcs_nickname>>. The summer holidays will be over before you know it and you mustn''t get used to sleeping in, otherwise you won''t be able to get up early when school starts again. From now on, set your alarm to wake up at a reasonable time." your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she stares at you expectantly.'
+		'"No excuses, <<$pcs_nickname>>! The summer holidays will be over before you know it and you mustn''t get used to sleeping in, otherwise you won''t be able to get up early when school starts again. From now on, set your alarm to wake up at a reasonable time." your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she stares at you expectantly.'
 		act 'Get up':
 			cla & *clr
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost4.jpg"></center>'
-			'As soon as you get off your now coverless bed, your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> is quick to resume her nagging, repeating what you already heard from her a few moments ago. "Summer is no excuse to laze around all day. You can''t sleep in anymore, not even for another fifteen minutes." She''s not even looking at you while she talks, but luckily for you that means she misses you rolling your eyes.'
+			'As soon as you get off your now coverless bed, your mother is quick to resume her nagging, repeating what you already heard from her a few moments ago. "Summer is no excuse to laze around all day. You can''t sleep in anymore, not even for another fifteen minutes." She''s not even looking at you while she talks, but luckily for you that means she misses you rolling your eyes.'
 			'"What are you going to do when school starts, or when you get a job? You better get into the habit of setting your alarm so you can wake up bright and early."'
 			act 'Continue':
 				cla & *clr
@@ -347,7 +343,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 				'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
 				'You let out an exasperated sigh. "Yeah yeah I know, you told me that already. So how early are we talking?"'
-				'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> shoots you a sharp look and you know to fix your attitude or else. "Well, that depends on what you plan to do in the morning. There''s breakfast, showering and brushing your teeth, doing your hair and then makeup and shaving if you really need to. If I remember right... Anya used to wake up at 06:00 for school."'
+				'Your mother shoots you a sharp look and you know to fix your attitude or else. "Well, that depends on what you plan to do in the morning. There''s breakfast, showering and brushing your teeth, doing your hair and then makeup and shaving if you really need to. If I remember right... Anya used to wake up at 06:00 for school."'
 				act 'Continue':
 					cla & *clr
 					minut += 2
@@ -355,8 +351,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 					'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost4.jpg"></center>'
 					'"You want me to wake up that early?!" you huff. "Can''t I wake up at like... 07:00?"'
-					'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> shrugs. "You could, but then you might have to cut corners or even end up running late to school, and I won''t be having any of that. Your teachers won''t either." she warns you before making her way towards the kitchen.'
-					if stat['think_virgin'] = 1: '"Oh, don''t forget; you need to head down to the clinic and see the gynecologist for a check up. Not just once, but every month." she adds quickly.'
+					'Your mother shrugs. "You could, but then you might have to cut corners or even end up running late to school, and I won''t be having any of that. Your teachers won''t either," she warns before making her way towards the kitchen.'
+					if stat['think_virgin'] = 1: '"Oh, don''t forget; you need to head down to the clinic and see the gynecologist for a check up. Not just once, but every month!" she adds quickly.'
 					act 'But why do I--':
 						$loc_arg = 'start'
 						cla & *clr
@@ -364,7 +360,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Before you can finish, she cuts you off. "I''m not going to have you running around town like so many of those other girls I see! Opening their legs for any boy that comes around..." She shakes her head in disgust. "I want a referral every month and it better tell me you''re still a virgin or else, understand?" your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says before she storms out of the room without giving you a chance to respond.'
+						'Before you can finish, she cuts you off. "I''m not going to have you running around town like so many of those other girls I see! Opening their legs for any boy that comes around..." She shakes her head in disgust. "I want a referral every month and it better tell me you''re still a virgin or else, understand?" she says before she storms out of the room without giving you a chance to respond.'
 						act 'I understand...':gt 'budilnik', 'start'
 					end
 				end

locations/bedrPar2.qsrc

@@ -20,9 +20,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 	'The room in which your parents sleep. Their large bed, <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''parents_wardrobe''">wardrobe</a> and other closets take up most of the space.'
 	if locat['Fam_inGad'] = 0:
 		if locat['Mother'] = 1 and locat['Stepdad'] = 1:
-			'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and stepfather are sleeping on the bed.'
+			'Your mother and stepfather are sleeping on the bed.'
 		elseif locat['Mother'] = 1:
-			'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> is sleeping on the bed.'
+			'Your mother is sleeping on the bed.'
 		elseif locat['Stepdad'] = 1:
 			'Your stepfather is sleeping on the bed.'
 		end
@@ -96,20 +96,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'wardrobe_search':
 	end
 	if rand(1,100) > 75:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/wardrobesearch'+rand(1,4)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		$failwords[0]='You cannot find anything interesting.'
-		$failwords[1]='You find some clothes and underwear.'
-		$failwords[2]='You dig through your mother''s closet, but find nothing interesting except underwear.'
+		$failwords[0]= 'You don''t find anything interesting.'
+		$failwords[1]= 'You find some clothes and underwear.'
+		$failwords[2]= 'You dig through your mother''s closet, but find nothing interesting except underwear.'
 		*pl $failwords[rand(0,2)]
 		killvar '$failwords'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/wardrobetoy.jpg"></center>'
-		$findmomtoy[0]='Digging through the closet you find a <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''momtoy_play''">Dildo</a>'
-		$findmomtoy[1]='Rummaging through your mother''s lingerie you find a small <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''momtoy_play''">Dildo</a>'
-		$findmomtoy[2]='You find your mother''s <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''momtoy_play''">toy</a>'
+		$findmomtoy[0]= 'Digging through the closet, you find a <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''momtoy_play''">dildo</a>.'
+		$findmomtoy[1]= 'Rummaging through your mother''s lingerie, you find a small <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''momtoy_play''">dildo</a>.'
+		$findmomtoy[2]= 'You find your mother''s <a href="exec: gt ''bedrPar2'',''momtoy_play''">toy</a>.'
 		*pl $findmomtoy[rand(0,2)]
 		killvar '$findmomtoy'
 	end
-	act 'Close the Cabinet': gt $loc, $loc_arg
+	act 'Close the cabinet': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'momtoy_play':
@@ -132,36 +132,36 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 	minut += 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You crack the door open just a little and you see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and Vladimir near their bed. You hear your mother say "Stop the kids are here." as Vlad starts running his hands all over her body.'
+	'You crack the door open just a little and you see your mother and Vladimir near their bed. "Stop! The kids are here," your mother says as Vlad starts running his hands over her body.'
 	'He doesn''t seem to care about what she says as he doesn''t stop. "Come on, they won''t hear us and you know you want it."'
-	act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
+	act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 
 	act 'Keep peeking':
 		cla & *clr
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You mother seems to be loving the attention and doesn''t put up much of a fight as he starts to undress her. Once she is mostly naked, he pushes her down on the bed so she is sitting on it in front of him, her head about crotch height to him, apparently knowing what he wants. She opens the fly on his pants and pulls out his cock, stroking it a few times in her hand until he gets hard. She then takes his dick into her mouth and starts sucking it. He moans softly as she does. "Fuck you are the best cock sucker ever, Natasha."'
+		'You mother seems to be loving the attention and doesn''t put up much of a fight as he starts to undress her. Once she''s mostly naked, he pushes her down on the bed so she''s sitting on it in front of him, her head about crotch height to him. Knowing what he wants, she opens the fly on his pants and pulls out his cock, stroking it a few times in her hand until he gets hard. She then takes his dick into her mouth and starts sucking it. He moans softly as she does. "Fuck, you''re the best cocksucker ever, Natasha."'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 		gs 'stat'
 
-		act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
+		act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 
 		act 'Keep peeking':
 			cla & *clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad3.jpg"></center>'
-			'After several minutes of watching your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> suck Vlad''s cock he says "Come on, I want to fuck you." With that he starts to strip and she helps him while continuing to suck his dick. Once he is naked, she finally stops and he lies down on the bed. She straddles him and quickly starts riding his dick reverse cowgirl style.'
-			'Both of them start moaning as they fuck. "Oh god Vlad, your dick feels so good in my pussy! It''s so big."'
+			'After spending several minutes sucking Vlad''s cock, she helps him strip while continuing to suck his dick. Once he''s naked, he lies down on the bed and she straddles him and quickly starts riding his dick reverse cowgirl style.'
+			'Both of them start moaning as they fuck. "Oh god Vlad, your dick feels so good in my pussy! It''s so big!"'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 
-			act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
+			act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 
 			act 'Keep peeking':
 				cla & *clr
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad4.jpg"></center>'
-				'Vlad suddenly grabs her and throws her on her side on the bed. He turns on his side, lifting up her leg with one hand while using the other to guide his cock. He feels around until he places the head of his dick against her anus, then he pushes it in, using only her pussy juices for lubrication. It slides in surprisingly easy and you can only guess that this is far from the first time your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> has had a dick in her ass. They both moan in pleasure and she rubs her clit as Vlad fucks her ass.'
+				'Vlad suddenly grabs her and throws her on her side on the bed. He turns on his side, lifting up her leg with one hand while using the other to guide his cock. He feels around until he places the head of his dick against her anus, then pushes it in, using only her pussy juices for lubrication. It slides in surprisingly easy and you can only guess that this is far from the first time your mother has had a dick in her ass. They both moan in pleasure and she rubs her clit as Vlad fucks her ass.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
@@ -170,11 +170,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 					cla & *clr
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/sex/momvlad5.jpg"></center>'
-					'They keep going for several more minutes until Vlad starts to pant and then he buries his dick balls deep in your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>''s ass and lets out a loud moan as he twitches a bit. After a few moments of this pass, he pulls out of her and rolls off the bed. She lays on her back and pulls her cheeks wide, giving Vlad and you both a good view of her asshole as cum starts leaking out of it. Vlad chuckles and says "You are such a nasty bitch Natasha."'
-					'She smiles at him and replies "That''s why you love me." With them now starting to get cleaned up, you decide it is time to go before you get caught.'
+					'They keep going for several more minutes until Vlad starts to pant and buries his dick balls deep in your mother''s ass and lets out a loud moan as he twitches. After a few seconds, he pulls out of her and rolls off the bed as she gets on her back and spreads her ass, giving both you and Vlad a good view of her asshole as his cum starts leaking out of it.'
+					'"You''re such a nasty bitch, Natasha!" he laughs.'
+					'She smiles at him. "That''s why you love me," she replies. They start getting cleaned up and you decide it''s time to go before you get caught.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 3
 					gs 'stat'
-					act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
+					act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 				end
 			end
 		end

locations/city_apt_building.qsrc

@@ -16,7 +16,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'housemates':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut +=1
 	gs 'stat'
-	 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/housemates.jpg"></center>'
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/housemates.jpg"></center>'
 	'Floor 1 - You don''t know anyone on this floor.'
 	'Floor 2 - You don''t know anyone on this floor.'
 	'Floor 3 - You don''t know anyone on this floor.'
@@ -36,14 +36,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_1':
 	CLOSE ALL
 	if sound = 0:PLAY 'sound/podezd.mp3',30
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Ground floor of the apartment building</font></b></center>'
+	'<center>First Floor</center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/stairs1.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>When you enter the building there is a short staircase down to the basement maintenance area and a short staircase up to the first floor, where there is a <a href="exec: gt ''city_apt_building'', ''housemates''">list</a> of the people who live here on the wall. There is a series of mailboxes for each apartment, two halls going off to each wing of the building, and more stairs going up. The area is fairly clean and well maintained.</center>'
+	'There is a short staircase down to the basement maintenance area and a short staircase up to the first floor, where there is a <a href="exec: gt ''city_apt_building'', ''housemates''">list</a> of the people who live here on the wall. There is a series of mailboxes for each apartment, two halls going off to each wing of the building, and more stairs going up. The area is fairly clean and well maintained.'
 	if rand(0,5) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor1_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor1_event_time):
 		floor1_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor1_events', '<<$ARGS[1]>>'
 	else
-		'<br>The stairwell is empty.'
+		'The stairwell is empty.'
 	end
 	act 'Leave the building': minut += 1 & gt 'city_residential', 'start'
 	act 'Go up to the second floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
@@ -55,14 +55,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_2':
 	$menu_arg = 'floor_2'
 	menu_off = 0
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center>2nd floor of the apartment building</center>'
+	'<center>Second Floor</center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/stairs2.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>The second floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. There is the occasional flickering light or even a light out, which are often not fixed for weeks.</center>'
+	'The second floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained except for the occasional flickering or busted light, which is often not fixed for weeks.'
 	if rand(0,3) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor2_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor2_event_time):
 		floor2_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor2_events'
 	else
-		'<br>The stairwell is empty.'
+		'The stairwell is empty.'
 	end
 	act 'Go down to the first floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_1', 'from_second_floor'
 	act 'Go up to the third floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_3', 'from_second_floor'
@@ -74,14 +74,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_3':
 	$menu_arg = 'floor_3'
 	menu_off = 0
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center>3rd floor of the apartment building</center>'
+	'<center>Third Floor</center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/stairs3.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>The third floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. There is the occasional flickering light or even a light out, which are often not fixed for weeks.</center>'
+	'The third floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained except for the occasional flickering or busted light, which is often not fixed for weeks.'
 	if rand(0,3) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor3_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor3_event_time):
 		floor3_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor3_events', '<<$ARGS[1]>>'
 	else
-		'<br>The stairwell is empty.'
+		'The stairwell is empty.'
 	end
 	act 'Go down to the second floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
 	act 'Go up to the fourth floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_4'
@@ -93,14 +93,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_4':
 	$menu_arg = 'floor_4'
 	menu_off = 0
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center>4th floor of the apartment building</center>'
+	'<center>Fourth Floor</center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/stairs3.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>The fourth floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. There is the occasional flickering light or even a light out, which are often not fixed for weeks.</center>'
+	'The fourth floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained except for the occasional flickering or busted light, which is often not fixed for weeks.'
 	if rand(0,3) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor4_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor4_event_time):
 		floor4_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor4_events'
 	else
-		'<br>The stairwell is empty.'
+		'The stairwell is empty.'
 	end
 	act 'Go down to the third floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_3'
 	act 'Go up to the fifth floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_5'
@@ -115,19 +115,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_5':
 	$menu_arg = 'floor_5'
 	menu_off = 0
 	gs 'stat'
-	'<center>Floor #5</center>'
+	'<center>Fifth Floor</center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/stairs3.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>The fifth floor stairwell looks like most of the other floors, but it has a final set of stairs at the other end of the hall that go up to the roof.</center>'
+	'The fifth floor stairwell looks much like the other floors, but has a final set of stairs at the other end of the hall that go up to the roof.'
 	if rand(0,3) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor5_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor5_event_time):
 		floor5_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor5_events'
 	else
-		'<br>The stairwell is empty.'
+		'The stairwell is empty.'
 	end
 	act 'Go down to the fourth floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_4'
 	act 'Go up to the roof': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building', 'roof'
 	act 'Take the elevator': gt 'city_apt_building','lift','floor_5'
-	act 'Apartment 49: Your home':gt 'korr'
+	act 'Apartment 69: Your home': gt 'korr'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'roof':
@@ -153,7 +153,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roof':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/roof/roofn.jpg"></center>'
 		end
 	end
-	'<center>The roof is fairly flat, with the roof access door in a raised part in the middle of the roof. Along one of the walls is another door to some type of storage or maintenance area. There are several ventilation stacks on the roof as well.</center>'
+	'<center>The roof is fairly flat, with the roof access door in a raised part in the middle of the roof. Along one of the walls is another door to some type of storage or maintenance area. There are several ventilation stacks dotted around the roof.</center>'
 
 	act 'Go down to the fifth floor':
 		if PCloswimwear = 1 or $clothingworntype = 'nude':
@@ -200,11 +200,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roof':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/roof/nude.jpg"></center>'
 				if krem = 0:
 					pcs_tan += 1
-					'You strip out of your clothes until you are naked, then lie down to sunbathe.'
+					'You strip out of your clothes and lie down to sunbathe.'
 				elseif krem > 0:
 					krem -= 1
 					pcs_tan += 3
-					'You strip out of your clothes until you are naked, then put sunblock on your body and lie down on the roof to sunbathe.'
+					'You strip out of your clothes, put sunblock on your body and lie down on the roof to sunbathe.'
 				end
 				act 'Get Up':gt 'city_apt_building', 'roof'
 			end
@@ -242,35 +242,35 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lift':
 	*clr & cla
 	minut += 1
 	gs 'stat'
-	res_lift_ev = RAND(0,150)
-	if res_lift_ev <=5:
+	res_lift_ev = rand(0,150)
+	if res_lift_ev <= 5:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/elevator1.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you are surprised to see a middle-aged naked woman handcuffed to the lift railing. She looks at you in panic, but you''re too baffled to do anything until she says "Can you please push floor three?"'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you''re surprised to see a middle-aged naked woman handcuffed to the lift railing. She looks at you in panic, but you''re too baffled to do anything until she says "Can you please push floor three?"'
 		'You nod, reach in and push the button to go up to floor three. The doors close and the elevator moves away from you.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
-	elseif res_lift_ev <=10:
+	elseif res_lift_ev <= 10:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/elevator2.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see a woman dressed in lingerie standing inside, her tits hanging out of her bra with her coat pulled back to show off her body! At first her eyes are closed, but when she opens them, she looks at you in panic and begins frantically pressing all of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see a woman dressed in lingerie standing inside, her breasts hanging out of her bra with her coat pulled back to show off her body. At first her eyes are closed, but when she opens them, she looks at you in panic and frantically presses all of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything as the door closes.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
 	elseif res_lift_ev <=15:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/elevator4_'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see a naked woman standing in it. She looks at you in panic and begins frantically pressing all of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see a naked woman standing in it. She looks at you in panic and begins frantically pressing all of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything as the door closes.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
-	elseif res_lift_ev <=20:
+	elseif res_lift_ev <= 20:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/elevator3_'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see a young man standing it with his limp dick hanging out! He has a huge smile on his face.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see a young man standing it with his limp dick hanging out. He has a huge smile on his face.'
 		if hotcat >= 6:
 			'He looks you over and his smile turns into a grin, obviously liking what he sees. "Get in here and go down, so I can go up." He then laughs at his own joke.'
 			'You''re too baffled to do anything and just stand there staring at him before he speaks up. "Come on, don''t be shy! Get that tight little body over here and wrap those beautiful lips around my cock."'
@@ -280,17 +280,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lift':
 			'You''re too baffled to do anything and just stand there staring at him before he speaks up. "Well come on, it isn''t going to suck itself."'
 			'When you still don''t move, he frowns and pushes one of the buttons. "Whatever, a fugly chick like you should be thankful I even offered!" You just stand there as the door closes and the elevator moves away from you.'
 		else
-			'His smile fades as he looks you over and gives you a slightly disgusted look. "Oh it''s you... I was hoping for a hot bitch." he whines before reaching over to push one of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled and insulted to do anything as the door closes and the elevator moves away from you.'
+			'His smile fades as he looks you over and gives you a disgusted look. "Oh it''s you... I was hoping for a hot bitch," he whines before reaching over to push one of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled and insulted to do anything as the door closes.'
 		end
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
-	elseif res_lift_ev <=25:
+	elseif res_lift_ev <= 25:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/elevator5.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see a woman standing in it. She looks at you and smiles, then pulls her top down to expose her tits, followed by pulling up her skirt and showing off her neatly trimmed pussy. She then reaches across and pushes one of the buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see a woman standing in it. She looks at you and smiles, then pulls her top down to expose her breasts, followed by pulling up her skirt and showing off her neatly trimmed pussy, before she reaches across and pushes one of the buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything as the door closes.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
-	elseif res_lift_ev <=30:
+	elseif res_lift_ev <= 30:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -299,21 +299,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lift':
 		if hotcat >= 6:
 			'She looks at you and gives you an inviting smile, then motions at you with her hand. "You can join us if you want."'
 			'Her talking makes him finally look over at you and he smiles as well. "Yeah, come join us."'
-			'You''re too baffled to do anything and just stand there staring at them before he speaks up. "Sorry, but we''re full in here." This makes her laugh as he pushes one of the buttons. The doors close and the elevator begins moving away from you.'
+			'You''re too baffled to do anything and just stand there staring at them before he speaks up. "Sorry, but we''re full in here." This makes her laugh as he pushes one of the buttons and the doors close.'
 		else
-			'She looks at you and laughs slightly, and then reaches over to push one of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+			'She looks at you and laughs slightly, then reaches over to push one of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything as the door closes.'
 		end
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
-	elseif res_lift_ev <=35:
+	elseif res_lift_ev <= 35:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/elevator7.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see two naked women standing in it. They look at you and then each other before laughing as one of them quickly reaches across and pushes one of the buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see two naked women standing in it. They look at you and then each other before laughing as one of them quickly reaches across and pushes one of the buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything as the door closes.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/lift.jpg"></center>'
-		'<center>The elevator in the apartment building was renovated at some point, it is still fairly old but in good working order.'
+		'The elevator in the apartment building was renovated at some point, but is still fairly old. It''s in good working order though.'
 		act 'Push button: Floor 1': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_1', 'from_lift'
 		act 'Push button: Floor 2': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
 		act 'Push button: Floor 3': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_3', 'from_lift'
@@ -324,10 +324,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lift':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'pod_objava':
-		*clr & cla
-		minut += 1
-		gs 'stat'
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/pod_ob'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
+	*clr & cla
+	minut += 1
+	gs 'stat'
+	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/pod_ob'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
 	act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_1'
 end
 
@@ -342,7 +342,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor1_events':
 	minut += 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor1_gop.jpg"></center>'
-	'A large group of gopnik boys are blocking the stairs up to the first floor. You''ve seen several of them in the building and most of the rest around the neighborhood. You don''t think most of them live here. You know gopniks can be dangerous, especially in large groups. You could try and walk past them, or just leave.'
+	'A large group of gopniks are blocking the stairs up to the first floor. You''ve seen several of them in the building and most of the rest around the neighborhood. You don''t think most of them live here. You know gopniks can be dangerous, especially in large groups. You could try and walk past them, or just leave.'
 	act 'Leave': 
 		if $ARGS[1] = 'from_second_floor':
 			minut += 1 
@@ -353,7 +353,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor1_events':
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/lift.jpg"></center>'
-			'<center>You get back in the elevator and decide to take it to another floor.'
+			'You get back in the elevator and decide to take it to another floor.'
 			act 'Push button: Floor 2': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
 			act 'Push button: Floor 3': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_3', 'from_lift'
 			act 'Push button: Floor 4': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_4'
@@ -367,10 +367,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor1_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor1_gop.jpg"></center>'
-		if hotcat >= 5:
-			'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them make comments, soon followed by them groping you. "Hey sweetheart, have a seat and drink with us.", "Damn girl you look fine, take a seat and take a load off, maybe help us get a load off!" which gets several of them to laugh. "Don''t be shy beautiful, we won''t bite, unless you ask us nicely." Several even ruder comments are said, followed by them laughing even more.'
-			*nl
-			'Several of them paw at your legs, or squeeze your ass. A few reach up and grab your breasts and squeeze, one even rubs your crotch. You do your best to fend off the groping hands but there are just too many of them. You feel yourself starting to panic, thinking they might not stop at just groping. Thankfully, when you finally get past them, they stay seated.'
+		if hotcat >= 6:
+			'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them make comments, soon followed by them groping you.' 
+			'"Hey sweetheart, have a seat and drink with us."'
+			'"Damn girl you look fine. Take a seat and take a load off, maybe help us get a load off!"' 
+			'"Don''t be shy beautiful, we won''t bite. Unless you ask us nicely."' 
+			'Several even ruder comments are said, followed by them laughing as they start pawing at your legs and squeezing your ass. A few reach up and squeeze your breasts and one even rubs your crotch. You do your best to fend off the groping hands but there''s just too many of them.' 
+			'You feel yourself starting to panic, thinking they might not stop at just groping. Thankfully, when you finally get past them, they stay seated.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 3, 'humiliation'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -378,7 +381,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor1_events':
 			minut += 2
 			pcs_mood -= 15
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them give you dirty looks and others make comments. "Watch where you''re stepping you fat cow.", "Anyone else smell rotten fish?" and other such comments. At one point you think one of them might do something, but you make it past them unharmed. However, you are a little upset at the comments made towards you.'
+			'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them give you dirty looks and others make comments.' 
+			'"Watch where you''re stepping, you fat cow!"' 
+			'"Anyone else smell rotten fish?"' 
+			'At one point, you think one of them might do something, but you make it past them unharmed. However, you''re a little upset at the comments made towards you.'
 		end
 		act 'Leave the building': minut += 1 & gt 'city_residential', 'start'
 		act 'Go up to the second floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
@@ -402,13 +408,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'There are a couple of young girls sitting on the steps, drinking. They both look pretty wasted. Just as you start to walk past them, one of them suddenly throws up. Her friend quickly scoots away from her and looks like she is about to throw up as well. The smell of the vomit makes you feel a little ill yourself. You quickly, while being careful not to step in the vomit, make your way past them.'
+		'There are a couple of young girls sitting on the steps who both look pretty wasted. Just as you start to walk past them, one of them suddenly throws up. Her friend quickly scoots away from her and looks like she''s about to throw up as well. The smell of the vomit makes you feel a little ill yourself. You quickly make your way past them, being careful not to step in the vomit.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_2'
 	elseif floor2 = 6:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_flash.jpg"></center>'
-		'A young woman stops on the stairs to the third floor in front of a young man. She pulls down her yoga pants, bending forward slightly, with her legs spread a bit. She gives the young man a nice view of her naked ass and pussy, and he stops dead in his tracks when confronted with the view. The girl then giggles, pulls up her pants and runs up the stairs. The young man takes off after her, gaining on her quickly. They soon disappear on the next floor up and shortly afterwards you hear her squealing in delight.'
+		'A young woman stops on the stairs to the third floor in front of a young man. She pulls down her yoga pants and bends forward slightly with her legs spread. She gives the young man a nice view of her naked ass and pussy, and he stops dead in his tracks when confronted with the view. The girl then giggles, pulls up her pants and runs up the stairs. The young man takes off after her, gaining on her quickly. They soon disappear on the next floor up and shortly afterwards you hear her squealing in delight.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -419,14 +425,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_girl.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a young woman, about your age, leaning against the wall. She is dressed in a tight, partially see-through, half-shirt that shows off her flat stomach, a very short skirt and mid calf high-heeled boots. All in all, fairly slutty. She looks at you as you approach and gives you a friendly smile. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
+		'You see a young woman about your age leaning against the wall. She''s dressed in a tight, partially see-through, half-shirt that shows off her flat stomach, a very short skirt and mid calf high-heeled boots. She looks at you as you approach and gives you a friendly smile. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_2'
 	elseif floor2 = 10 or floor2 = 11:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_gop.jpg"></center>'
-		'Sitting on the stairs are two young gopnik boys with a gopnik girl between them. They are all drinking from bottles and look a little drunk. They are all a few years younger than you. As you squeeze your way past them they give you dirty looks, but don''t say anything.'
+		'Sitting on the stairs are two young gopnik boys with a gopnik girl between them. They''re all drinking from bottles and look a little drunk. As you squeeze your way past them, they give you dirty looks, but don''t say anything.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_2'
 	elseif floor2 = 12:
 		*clr & cla
@@ -441,7 +447,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_nudedoor.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a woman standing outside, next to an apartment door. You are quite distracted as she is naked from the waist up, having been in the process of pulling her dress down while a man watched. When she sees you, she panics and quickly pulls her dress back up before running into the apartment. The young man laughs, looks at you and winks before following her inside.'
+		'You see a woman standing next to an apartment door naked from the waist up, having been in the process of pulling her dress down while a man watched. When she sees you, she panics and quickly pulls her dress back up before running into the apartment. The young man laughs, looks at you and winks before following her inside.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -450,7 +456,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_up.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you get to the stairwell landing, you see a woman walking up to the third floor. You can''t help but notice her skirt is very short and she is not wearing any panties. As she nears the top of the stairs you get a clear view of her pussy. You are unsure if she is aware that she has herself on display or not, she acts like she isn''t aware but she might just enjoy it. Either way, a moment later she is on the next floor and out of sight.'
+		'As you get to the stairwell landing, you see a woman walking up to the third floor. You notice that her skirt is very short and that she isn''t wearing any panties. As she nears the top of the stairs, you get a clear view of her pussy. You''re unsure if she was aware that she had herself on display or not.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -459,7 +465,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor2_bj.jpg"></center>'
-		'Sitting on the stairs is a naked man and a woman dressed in see through lingerie. She is squatting in front of him with her legs spread, showing off her pussy while she sucks his dick. He looks at you as you approach and gives you a huge smile. He backs up against the wall as best as he can and pulls her over a bit, giving you just enough room to squeeze past them. She never does stop giving him a blowjob, even as you brush past her.'
+		'Sitting on the stairs is a naked man and a woman dressed in see through lingerie. She''s squatting in front of him with her legs spread, showing off her pussy while she sucks his dick. He looks at you as you approach and gives you a huge smile. He backs up against the wall as best as he can and pulls her over, giving you just enough room to squeeze past them. She never does stop giving him a blowjob, even as you brush past her.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -478,7 +484,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_clothed.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see one of your neighbors, a young woman about your age. You''re not sure you would call her a gopnik, since she is dressed in alternative clothing, but she is doing the gopnik squat in a corner. She gives you a friendly smile and a wave. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
+		'You see one of your neighbors, a young woman about your age dressed in an alternative style. She gives you a friendly smile and a wave and you exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_3'
 	elseif floor3 = 3 or floor3 = 4:
 		*clr & cla
@@ -486,7 +492,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'A young woman appears to be passed out on the landing, her belongings sitting on the stairs near her. You have no idea how long she has been here.'
+		'A young woman appears to be passed out on the landing, her belongings sitting on the stairs near her. You have no idea how long she''s been here.'
 		act 'Ignore her and continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_3'
 		act 'Help her': 
 			*clr & cla
@@ -494,7 +500,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 			pcs_mood += 10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop to check on her. She seems fine, but you can smell the alcohol on her before you even get to close to her. You shake her and she doesn''t wake up. You squat down next to her, grabbing both of her shoulders, and shake her really hard. It takes a few minutes of shaking but she finally wakes up, her breath having a near overwhelming smell of alcohol on it. She mutters something about five more minutes, but you finally manage to get her up and on her feet. You find out she lives on the next floor up and help her upstairs to her apartment. She tries to use her keys to open the door, but fails and drops them.'
+			'You stop to check on her. She seems fine, but you can smell the alcohol on her before you even get to close to her. You shake her, but she doesn''t wake up, so you squat down next to her, grab her shoulders, and shake her really hard. It takes a few minutes, but she finally wakes up, her breath having a near overwhelming smell of alcohol on it. She mutters something about five more minutes, but you finally manage to get her up and on her feet. You find out she lives on the next floor up and help her upstairs to her apartment. She tries to use her keys to open the door, but fails and drops them.'
 		    'Before you can pick up the keys, the door opens. An older woman takes one look at the drunk woman and start ranting at her. She takes the young woman from you and thanks you for helping her. Once she has retrieved the keys from the floor and helped the young woman inside, she closes the door. You can hear her berating the younger woman through the door.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 		end
@@ -502,7 +508,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_flash.jpg"></center>'
-		'An older woman stops on the stairs to the fourth floor for a moment, in front of an older man. She pulls her skirt up, briefly exposing her pussy to him before she drops her skirt back in place and he walks up the few steps to her and gives her a kiss. After they kiss a bit, they walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
+		'An older woman stops on the stairs to the fourth floor in front of an older man. She pulls her skirt up, briefly exposing her pussy to him before she drops her skirt back in place and he walks up the few steps to her and gives her a kiss. After they finish kissing, they walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -513,14 +519,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_girls.jpg"></center>'
-		'Two young girls sit on the stairs filling bottles of juice with vodka. They both look a few years younger than you. They, for the most part, ignore you as you walk past them, intent on their task at hand.'
+		'Two young girls sit on the stairs filling bottles of juice with vodka. They ignore you as you walk past them, intent on their task at hand.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_3'
 	elseif floor3 = 9 or floor3 = 10 or floor3 = 11:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_gop.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the stairwell between the floors is a large group of gopnik boys. You have seen several of them in the building, and most of the rest around the neighborhood. You don''t think most of them live here. You know gopniks can be dangerous especially in large groups. You could try and walk past them, or just leave.'
+		'In the stairwell between the floors is a large group of gopniks. You''ve seen several of them in the building, and most of the rest around the neighborhood. You don''t think most of them live here. You know gopniks can be dangerous especially in large groups. You could try and walk past them, or just leave.'
 		act 'Leave': 
 			if $ARGS[1]= 'from_second_floor':
 				minut += 1 
@@ -545,10 +551,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 			*clr & cla
 			menu_off = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_gop.jpg"></center>'
-			if hotcat >= 5:
-				'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them make comments, which are soon followed by them groping you. "Hey sweetheart, have a seat and drink with us.", "Damn girl, you look fine! Take a seat and take a load off, maybe help us get a load off!" which gets several of them to laugh. "Don''t be shy beautiful, we won''t bite. Not unless you ask us to nicely." Several even ruder comments are made, followed by them laughing even more.'
-				*nl
-				'Several of them paw at your legs, or squeeze your ass. A couple reach up and grab your breasts and squeeze, one even rubs your crotch. You do your best to fend off the groping hands but there are just too many of them and you feel yourself starting to panic. They might not stop at just groping. Thankfully, when you finally get past them, they stay seated.'
+			if hotcat >= 6:
+				'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them make comments, soon followed by them groping you.' 
+				'"Hey sweetheart, have a seat and drink with us."'
+				'"Damn girl you look fine. Take a seat and take a load off, maybe help us get a load off!"' 
+				'"Don''t be shy beautiful, we won''t bite. Unless you ask us nicely."' 
+				'Several even ruder comments are said, followed by them laughing as they start pawing at your legs and squeezing your ass. A few reach up and squeeze your breasts and one even rubs your crotch. You do your best to fend off the groping hands but there''s just too many of them.' 
+				'You feel yourself starting to panic, thinking they might not stop at just groping. Thankfully, when you finally get past them, they stay seated.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'forplay', 3, 'humiliation'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -556,7 +565,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 				minut += 2
 				pcs_mood -= 15
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You decide to push on and go past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them give you dirty looks and others make comments. "Watch where you''re stepping you fat cow.", "Anyone else smell rotten fish?" and other such comments. You think one of them might do something, but you make it past them unharmed. However, you are a little upset at the comments directed towards you.'
+				'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them give you dirty looks and others make comments.' 
+				'"Watch where you''re stepping, you fat cow!"' 
+				'"Anyone else smell rotten fish?"' 
+				'At one point, you think one of them might do something, but you make it past them unharmed. However, you''re a little upset at the comments made towards you.'
 			end
 			act 'Go down to the second floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
 			act 'Go up to the fourth floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_4'
@@ -577,13 +589,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_nudedoor.jpg"></center>'
 		if meet_nudedoor_woman3 = 0:
 			meet_nudedoor_woman3 = 1
-			'As you are about to walk by one of the apartments, the door suddenly opens. A young, nude woman is standing there, wearing only a smile. She laughs a little when she sees you. "Sorry I thought you were someone else."'
+			'As you''re about to walk by one of the apartments, the door suddenly opens. A young, nude woman is standing there, wearing only a smile. She laughs when she sees you. "Sorry, I thought you were someone else."'
 			'You can''t help but smile back at her. "It''s okay, I don''t mind."'
-			'She laughs at that. "Well, nice meeting you." she says before closing the door.'
+			'She laughs again. "Well, nice meeting you," she says before closing the door.'
 		else
-			'As you are about to walk by one of the apartments, the door suddenly opens. A young, nude woman is standing there wearing only a smile. She laughs when she sees you again. "Sorry again, I thought you were my boyfriend coming home."'
-			'You can''t help but smile back at her. "Not a problem. He is a lucky man to have you greet him in such a way."'
-			'She laughs at that. "Thanks! Well, nice seeing you again." she says before closing the door.'
+			'As you''re about to walk by one of the apartments, the door suddenly opens. A young, nude woman is standing there wearing only a smile. She laughs when she sees you again. "Sorry again, I thought you were my boyfriend coming home."'
+			'You can''t help but smile back at her. "Not a problem. He''s a lucky man to have you greet him in such a way."'
+			'She laughs at that. "Thanks! Well, nice seeing you," she says before closing the door.'
 		end
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -593,7 +605,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_up.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you get to the stairwell landing, you see a woman walking up to the fourth floor with a man following her. As she nears the top of the stairs, she lifts her skirt and shows off her naked ass. The guy laughs and then lunges for her, but she giggles and takes off up the stairs. A moment later they disappear, shortly followed by the sound of a door opening and closing.'
+		'As you get to the stairwell landing, you see a woman walking up to the fourth floor with a man following her. As she nears the top of the stairs, she lifts her skirt and shows off her naked ass. The guy laughs and lunges for her, but she giggles and takes off up the stairs, shortly followed by the sound of a door opening and closing.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -603,7 +615,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor3_ir.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a middle-aged woman making out with a younger, black man. Her hand is on the doorknob of a slightly opened apartment door, which you assume is hers. You don''t know if the man lives with her or not. They seem completely oblivious to you as you walk past them.'
+		'You see a middle-aged woman making out with a younger, black man. Her hand is on the doorknob of a slightly opened apartment door, which you assume is hers. They seem completely oblivious to you as you walk past them.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -623,7 +635,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor3_fuck.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman, by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the stairs, you see a woman in the stairwell on her back, but you can''t really make her out, other than her bare legs spread wide. A man is thrusting between her legs with his pants pulled down. Another man appears to be passed out, or sleeping, next to the two having sex. You are unsure what the story is here, but you figure it is likely a good one and that the sleeping man will likely not enjoy the story as much as everyone else, if he ever learns of it.'
+		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman, by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the stairs, you see a woman in the stairwell on her back, but you can''t really make her out, other than her bare legs spread wide. A man is thrusting between her legs with his pants pulled down.' 
+		'Another man appears to be passed out, or sleeping, next to the two having sex. You''re unsure what the story is here, but you figure it''s likely a good one and that the sleeping man will likely not enjoy the story as much as everyone else, if he ever learns of it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -644,7 +657,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_clothed.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see one of your neighbors, a young woman about your age, sitting on the steps. She scoots over when you approach to allow you to walk past her. She gives you a friendly smile and a wave. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
+		'You see one of your neighbors, a young woman about your age, sitting on the steps. She scoots over when you approach to allow you to walk past her. She gives you a friendly smile and a wave and you exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 	elseif floor4 = 4 or floor4 = 5:
 		*clr & cla
@@ -652,7 +665,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'A young woman appears to be passed out on the stairs, her belongings sitting on the stairs near her. You have no idea how long she has been laying here.'
+		'A young woman appears to be passed out on the stairs, her belongings sitting on the stairs near her. You have no idea how long she''s been here.'
 		act 'Ignore her and continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 		act 'Help her': 
 			*clr & cla
@@ -660,7 +673,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 			pcs_mood += 10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop to check on her. She seems fine, but you can smell the alcohol on her before you even get close to her. You shake her and she doesn''t wake up. You squat down next to her, grabbing both her shoulders, and shake her really hard. It takes a few minutes of shaking but she finally wakes up, her breath having a near overwhelming smell of alcohol on it. She mutters something about five more minutes, but you finally manage to get her up and on her feet. You find out she lives on this floor and you help her to her apartment. She tries to use her keys to open the door, but fails and drops them.'
+			'You stop to check on her. She seems fine, but you can smell the alcohol on her before you even get close to her. You shake her, but she doesn''t wake up, so you squat down next to her, grab her shoulders, and shake her really hard. It takes a few minutes, but she finally wakes up, her breath having a near overwhelming smell of alcohol on it. She mutters something about five more minutes, but you finally manage to get her up and on her feet. You find out she lives on this floor and you help her to her apartment. She tries to use her keys to open the door, but fails and drops them.'
 			'Before you can pick up the keys, the door opens. An older woman takes one look at the drunk woman and starts ranting at her. She takes the young woman from you and thanks you for helping her. Once she has retrieved the keys from the floor and helped the young woman inside, she closes the door. You can hear her berating the younger woman through the door.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 		end
@@ -668,7 +681,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_flash.jpg"></center>'
-		'A middle-aged woman stops on the stairs to the fifth floor for a moment, in front of a man around her age. She pulls her skirt up, exposing her pussy to the man. She drops the skirt back in place and he walks up the few steps to her and gives her a kiss. After they kiss a bit, they walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
+		'A middle-aged woman stops on the stairs to the fifth floor in front of a man around her age. She pulls her skirt up, exposing her pussy to the man. She drops the skirt back in place and he walks up the few steps to her and gives her a kiss. After they finish kissing, they walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -679,21 +692,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_girls.jpg"></center>'
-		'Two young girls sit on the stairs talking. They both look a few years younger than you. They, for the most part, ignore you as you walk past them - absorbed in their conversation. You can''t help but overhear parts of their conversation. Boys. They are talking about how cute some boys that they know are.'
+		'Two young girls sit on the stairs talking. They ignore you as you walk past them, absorbed in their conversation about some cute boys they know.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 	elseif floor4 = 10 or floor4 = 11 or floor3 = 12:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_gop.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the stairwell between the floors are three gopnik boys, with a young girl out between them who appears to be so drunk she is nearly out of it completely. One of them has pulled her shirt part way up as you approach them. As you look at the girl, one of them says. "Mind your own business, bitch!"'
-		'She doesn''t seem to be trying to stop them from groping her or pulling at her clothes. Not sure what else to do you continue on your way.'
+		'In the stairwell between the floors are three gopnik boys, with a young girl out between them who looks completely wasted. One of them has pulled her shirt part way up as you approach them. As you look at the girl, one of them says. "Mind your own business, bitch!"'
+		'She doesn''t seem to be trying to stop them from groping her or pulling at her clothes. Not sure what else to do, you continue on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 	elseif floor4 = 13:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_naked.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the stairwell between the floors you see a girl, about your age, leaning against the wall. She is completely naked and smoking a cigarette. When she sees you, she smiles. "Hello!" she says, as if everything was normal. You greet her in return and try not to stare. She continues to smoke as you walk by her.'
+		'In the stairwell between the floors you see a girl about your age leaning against the wall, completely naked and smoking a cigarette. When she sees you, she smiles. "Hello!" she says, as if everything was normal. You greet her in return and try not to stare as she continues to smoke and you walk by her.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -704,13 +717,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		meet_nudedoor_woman3 = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_shop'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a beautiful woman dressed in nice clothes carrying a shopping bag. You have seen her around before and you know she lives on this floor. Almost every time you see her she is carrying some shopping bags. She either makes plenty of money or someone else buys her a lot of stuff. She smiles at you as she heads towards her apartment.'
+		'You see a beautiful woman dressed in nice clothes carrying a shopping bag. You''ve seen her around before and you know she lives on this floor. Almost every time you see her, she''s carrying some shopping bags. She either makes plenty of money or someone else buys her a lot of stuff. She smiles at you as she heads towards her apartment.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 	elseif floor4 = 17:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_up.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you get to the stairwell landing you see a man looking up the stairs at a middle aged-woman. She is wearing a robe that is hanging wide open. She is completely naked, her breasts and trimmed pussy on full display. They both look at you and smile before the guy pulls out his phone and starts taking pictures. After that they both ignore you as you go on your way.'
+		'As you get to the stairwell landing you see a man looking up the stairs at a middle aged-woman wearing a robe that''s hanging wide open, her breasts and trimmed pussy on full display. They both look at you and smile before the guy pulls out his phone and starts taking pictures. After that, they both ignore you as you go on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -719,9 +732,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor4_bdsm.jpg"></center>'
-		'On the landing, bent over the railing, is a woman. She is wearing black baby doll lingerie, stockings and black high heels, as well as ankle and wrist cuffs. The ankle cuffs are attached to the railing in a way that forces her legs apart. Her hands are attached on the other side of the railing together. She blushes when she sees you, but you also notice that she smiles as she looks away from you. You get the feeling she is enjoying the humiliation of being found like this.'
-		*nl
-		'As you walk past her, you can''t help but notice she is not wearing panties under the baby doll lingerie. This gives you a full view of her pussy and the cum dripping down her inner thighs. You glance around but don''t see anyone else around, and she seems content to remain like this, so you go on your way.'
+		'On the landing, bent over the railing, is a woman wearing black baby doll lingerie, stockings and black high heels, as well as ankle and wrist cuffs. The ankle cuffs are attached to the railing in a way that forces her legs apart. Her hands are attached on the other side of the railing together. She blushes when she sees you, but you also notice that she smiles as she looks away from you. You get the feeling she''s enjoying the humiliation of being found like this.'
+		'As you walk past her, you can''t help but notice she''s not wearing panties under the baby doll lingerie. This gives you a full view of her pussy and the cum dripping down her inner thighs. You glance around but don''t see anyone else around, and she seems content to remain like this, so you go on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -730,7 +742,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor4_bottle.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you make your way to the stairs you notice a few gopnik boys, who seem focused on someone else as they are giving them encouragement to keep going. As you get close enough, you see a young woman naked from the waist down fucking her ass with a bottle. When she sees you, she blushes and quickly jumps up and runs down one of the hallways. She is quickly followed by the boys, one of whom pauses long enough to give you a dirty look for ruining their fun.'
+		'As you make your way to the stairs you notice a few gopnik boys, who seem focused on someone else as they''re giving them encouragement to keep going. As you get close enough, you see a young woman naked from the waist down fucking her ass with a bottle. When she sees you, she blushes and quickly jumps up and runs down one of the hallways. She''s quickly followed by the boys, one of whom pauses long enough to give you a dirty look for ruining their fun.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -739,7 +751,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor4_bj.jpg"></center>'
-		'A young man stands on the stairs in the stairwell with his pants pulled down just enough for his cock to be free. A girl, about his age, is bent over and sucking his dick for all it is worth. As you move past them, he grins at you and grabs hold of the back of her head with his hands and starts face fucking the girl. He begins forcing his dick balls deep into her mouth and down her throat, and you can hear her gagging. Just before the sounds of them fade completely you hear him say "Fuck yeah, swallow it bitch!"'
+		'A young man stands on the stairs in the stairwell with his pants pulled down just enough for his cock to be free. A girl, about his age, is bent over and sucking his dick. As you walk past them, he grins at you as he grabs hold of the back of her head with his hands and starts forcing his dick balls deep into her mouth and down her throat, gagging her. Just before the sounds of them fade completely, you hear him say "Fuck yeah, swallow it bitch!"'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -748,7 +760,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor4_fuck.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman, by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the landing you see, down one of the halls, a light-skinned black girl, about your age. Her pants are pulled down to her knees as she leans forward with her hands on the wall, her ass sticking out. A slightly older man is fucking her from behind. She looks in your direction, but you''re not sure if she noticed you or not. She looks, and sounds, like she is really enjoying herself. You decide to move on and leave them to it.'
+		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman, by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the landing, you see a light-skinned black girl about your age, her pants pulled down to her knees as she leans forward with her hands on the wall, her ass sticking out. A slightly older man is fucking her from behind. She looks in your direction, but you''re not sure if she noticed you or not. She looks, and sounds, like she''s really enjoying herself. You decide to move on and leave them to it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -756,26 +768,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 	elseif floor4 = 22 or floor4 = 23 and (week < 6 and hour >= 19 and hour <= 23) or (week >=6 and hour >= 10 and hour <= 23):
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src=images/characters/city/tryndin/tryndin_stairs.jpg></center>'
 		if trychat = 0:
-			'You see a young man, around your sister''s age, in the hallway. You can''t help but notice that he''s pretty good looking. He looks up at you as you get close and gives you a pleasant smile. "You''ve moved into apartment 49, right?"'
+			'You see a young man, around your sister''s age, in the hallway. You can''t help but notice that he''s pretty good looking. He looks up at you as you get close and gives you a pleasant smile. "You''ve moved into apartment 69, right?"'
 			act 'Yes':
 				*clr & cla
 				trychat += 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big77.jpg"></center>'
-				'You nod. "Yeah, I live in apartment 49." you tell him.'
-				'The guy looks visibly delighted and says "Wonderful, it''s always nice meeting new people. By the way I''m Tryndin, and you are?"'
+				'You nod. "Yeah?"'
+				'The guy looks visibly delighted. "Wonderful, it''s always nice meeting new people. By the way, I''m Tryndin. You are?"'
 				act '<<$pcs_nickname>>':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/headshots_main/big77.jpg"></center>'
-					'"My name is <<$pcs_nickname>>," you say.'
-					'He nods his head and turns towards a nearby door. The door has number 37 on it. Digging in his pocket, he pulls out a set of keys and begins to unlock the door. "That''s a pretty name. I live in this apartment here. I need to get going, but I hope to see you around." As he opens the door an elderly woman looks out at him, and then at you, giving you a disapproving look. "Mother, stop hanging around the front door!" he says in an annoyed tone before he closes the door.'
+					'"<<$pcs_nickname>>," you reply.'
+					'He nods his head and turns towards a nearby door. The door has number 37 on it. Digging in his pocket, he pulls out a set of keys and unlocks the door. "That''s a pretty name. I live in this apartment here. I need to get going, but I hope to see you around." As he opens the door, an elderly woman looks out at him, and then at you, giving you a disapproving look. "Mother, stop hanging around the front door!" he says in an annoyed tone before he closes the door.'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 				end
 			end
 		else
-			'Your neighbor, <a href="exec:Gt ''tryndin''">Tryndin</a>, is in the hallway. He''s smoking a cigarette, flicking the ashes into a jar. He gives you a nod when he notices you. "Hello."'
+			'Your neighbor, <a href="exec:gt ''tryndin''">Tryndin</a>, is in the hallway smoking a cigarette and flicking the ashes into a jar. He gives you a nod when he notices you. "Hello."'
 			act 'Say "hello" and leave': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 			act 'Have a chat with Tryndin': gt 'tryndin', 'stairwell_chat'
 		end
@@ -793,7 +805,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_clothed.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see one of your neighbors, a young woman about your age, walking down the stairs to the fourth floor. She gives you a friendly smile and a wave. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
+		'You see one of your neighbors, a young woman about your age, walking down the stairs to the fourth floor. She gives you a friendly smile and a wave and you exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_5'
 	elseif floor5 = 4 or floor5 = 5:
 		*clr & cla
@@ -801,13 +813,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'On the stairs is a girl, a few years younger than you. She is drinking from a bottle and obviously very drunk. She grins at you as you approach and you exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
+		'On the stairs is a girl drinking from a bottle, clearly very drunk. She grins at you as you approach and you exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_5'
 	elseif floor5 = 6:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_flash.jpg"></center>'
-		'A middle-aged woman at the top of the stairs is looking down at a man near the landing of the stairs below. She pulls up her top to expose her tits to him and they both laugh before she hurries down the stairs to catch up to him. They exchange a quick kiss and then walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
+		'A middle-aged woman at the top of the stairs is looking down at a man near the landing of the stairs below. She pulls up her top to expose her breasts to him and they both laugh before she hurries down the stairs to catch up to him. They exchange a quick kiss before walking down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -818,14 +830,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_girls.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the hallway near the roof access are two girls and guy. One girl is sitting and looking in your direction, while the other is on all-fours with the guy behind her. They are all clothed but the guy acts like he is fucking the girl and they all seem to find it funny. They keep talking and playing around as you continue on your way.'
+		'Two girls and a guy are in the hallway near the roof access. One of the girls is sitting and looking in your direction while the other is on all-fours with the guy behind her. They''re all clothed, but the guy acts like he''s fucking the girl and they all seem to find it funny. They keep talking and playing around as you continue on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_5'
 	elseif floor5 = 10 or floor5 = 11 or floor5 = 12:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_gop.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the hallway are a few gopniks, squatting next to a tiny table. They have a few drinks and some food sat on the table. They talk, laugh and smoke as they eat and drink. When you walk past them they offer you some food, but you politely decline - as it doesn''t look very good - and continue on your way.'
+		'In the hallway are a few gopniks squatting next to a tiny table with a few drinks and some food. They talk, laugh and smoke as they eat and drink. They offer you some food when you walk past, but you politely decline as it doesn''t look very good and continue on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_5'
 	elseif floor5 = 13:
 		*clr & cla
@@ -840,7 +852,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor5_bdsm.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the hallway are two young woman. One is blonde and she is wearing boots and a skirt, while naked from the waist up. The other, a brunette, is completely naked with her hands are tied behind her back. As you watch the blonde puts a large collar around the other one''s neck, and then attaches a leash to it. With the leash in place, she steps back, unbinds the brunette''s hands, and slaps her on the ass. She drops to the floor on all-fours and the blonde starts walking, holding onto the leash as the brunette follows behind like a dog. The blonde smiles at you and waves and you exchange hellos with her. The brunette never says a word as they move past you. After taking a moment to reflect on what you just seen, you continue on your way.'
+		'Two young women are in the hallway. One is blonde and is wearing boots and a skirt, while naked from the waist up. The other, a brunette, is completely naked with her hands tied behind her back. You watch as the blonde puts a large collar around the other one''s neck and attaches a leash to it. With the leash in place, she steps back, unbinds the brunette''s hands and slaps her on the ass. She drops to the floor on all-fours and the blonde starts walking, holding onto the leash as the brunette follows behind like a dog. The blonde smiles at you and waves while the brunette never says a word as they move past you.' 
+		'After taking a second to reflect on what you just seen, you continue on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -850,13 +863,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor5_couple.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a middle-aged woman making out with a younger black man. Her hand is on the doorknob of a slightly opened apartment door - you assume she lives there. You don''t know if the man lives with her or not. They seem completely oblivious to you as you walk past them.'
+		'You see a middle-aged woman making out with a younger, black man. Her hand is on the doorknob of a slightly opened apartment door, which you assume is hers. They seem completely oblivious to you as you walk past them.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_5'
 	elseif floor5 = 17:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor5_bj.jpg"></center>'
-		'A man stands on the stairs in the stairwell completely naked with his back to the wall. A woman, about his age, stands on the stairs a couple of steps down, also completely naked. She is bent forward sucking his dick for all it is worth. As you go past them, he grins at you and takes hold of the back of her head with his hands and starts face fucking the girl. He begins forcing his dick balls-deep into her mouth and down her throat, you can hear her gagging as he does so. Just before the sounds of them fades completely you hear him shout "Oh my god, that was amazing!"'
+		'A young man stands on the stairs in the stairwell with his pants pulled down just enough for his cock to be free. A girl, about his age, is bent over and sucking his dick. As you walk past them, he grins at you as he grabs hold of the back of her head with his hands and starts forcing his dick balls deep into her mouth and down her throat, gagging her. Just before the sounds of them fades completely, you hear him shout "Oh my god, that was amazing!"'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -865,7 +878,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/stairs/sex/floor5_fuck.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the stairs, you see a woman on her back in the stairwell, but you can''t really make her out - other than her bare legs spread wide. A topless man with his pants pulled down is between her legs, thrusting. As you get closer, the man sees you and gives you a huge grin and a thumbs up. He doesn''t stop thrusting into the woman underneath him as he does. Feeling a little awkward, you continue on your way.'
+		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman by the sounds of it. As you approach the stairs, you see a woman on her back in the stairwell, but you can''t really make her out other than her bare legs spread wide. A topless man with his pants pulled down is between her legs, thrusting. As you get closer, the man sees you and gives you a huge grin and a thumbs up. He doesn''t stop thrusting into the woman underneath him as he does. Feeling a little awkward, you continue on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'

locations/housecall.qsrc

@@ -1,190 +1,168 @@
 # housecall
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel0':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel00.jpg"></center>'
-	'You open the door. Standing in the threshold is a pretty young girl smiling at you carrying a doctors bag in her hand.'
-	'You look at her and realize she must be the doctor. "Hello, doctor"'
-	'She smiles at you. "Hello. My name is Ninel P. I am the new local doctor. Where is the patient?"'
-	'"That would be me."'
-	'She nods. "I Understand. Then I need you to go back to bed." She helps you back to bed.'
+	'You open the door and see a pretty young girl carrying a medical bag in her hand standing on the threshold.'
+	'She smiles at you. "Hello. My name is Ninel Pavlovna, and I''m the new local doctor. Where is the patient?"'
+	'"That would be me," you reply.'
+	'She nods. "I see. Then I need you to go back to bed."'
 
-	act 'Let the Doctor help you back to your bed':
+	act 'Let her help you back to bed':
 		cla
-		*clr
 		ninelmet = 1
-		'The doctor sits down on the edge of your bed and looks you over.'
-		'She asks. "What are the symptoms <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?"'
-		'You smile weakly and nod yes. "Of course Doctor, I think I have the flu. My coughs are just killing me, making my throat very sore, and I think I have a fever too."'
+		'Ninel sits on the edge of your bed and looks you over.'
+		'"What are the symptoms, <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?" she asks.'
+		'You smile weakly and nod. "Of course, Doctor. I think I have the flu. My coughs are just killing me, making my throat very sore, and I think I have a fever too."'
 		'She feels your forehead. "Runny nose? Headaches? Aching body?"'
-		'You nod. "Yes and sneezing!"'
-		'She nods in understanding. "Now I will need to examine you. Please get undressed."'
+		'You nod. "Yes. And sneezing!"'
+		'She nods. "I''ll need to examine you. Please undress."'
 
 		act 'Undress':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			pcs_horny += 10
-			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You get undressed, once your naked the doctor listens to your lungs with a stethoscope for a long time. Her hands feel cool and gentle as they touch and caress your skin as she uses the stethoscope.'
-			'As she listens. "Yes, wheezing. Now open your mouth."'
+			'Once you''re undressed, Ninel listens to your lungs with a stethoscope, her hands feeling cool and gentle as they touch and caress your skin.' 
+			'"Yes, wheezing. Now open your mouth."'
 
 			act 'Open your mouth':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel03.jpg"></center>'
-				'You open your mouth and the doctor examines your sore throat.'
-				'She uses a tongue depressor to look in your mouth. "Hmmm... your throat is very red and inflamed. Now I need to take your temperature."'
+				'You open your mouth and she examines your sore throat.'
+				'She uses a tongue depressor to look in your mouth. "Hmmm... Your throat is very red and inflamed. Now I need to take your temperature."'
 
 				act 'Take temperature':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel04.jpg"></center>'
-					'You keep your mouth open for the thermometer.'
-					'The doctor shakes her head no. "No, not orally. For a more accurate reading we need to take your temperature rectally."'
-					'Your eyes widen with surprise and you blush slightly. "Uh-uh."'
-					'The doctor smiles reassuringly to you. "Do not be embarrassed or afraid, <<$pcs_nickname>>, is not painful."'
-					'You hesitate a moment. "Well if you''re sure."'
-					'The doctor pats your shoulder. "I''m sure. Now lie down and roll over onto your stomach. Then I will need you to use your hands to spread buttocks."'
-
-					act 'Do as the Doctor asks':
-						cla
-						*clr
-						clr
-						gs 'stat'
+					'You keep your mouth open for the thermometer, but she shakes her head. "No, not orally. For a more accurate reading, we need to take your temperature rectally."'
+					'Your eyes widen with surprise and you blush slightly. "Oh."'
+					'She smiles reassuringly at you. "Don''t be embarrassed or afraid, <<$pcs_nickname>>. It''s not painful."'
+					'You hesitate. "Well, if you''re sure..."'
+					'She pats your shoulder. "I''m sure. Now lie down and roll over onto your stomach. I''ll need you to use your hands to spread your buttocks."'
+
+					act 'Do as the doctor asks':
+						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom2.jpg"></center>'
-						'You obediently roll over and spread ass cheeks with your hands. The Doctor lubricates your anus thoroughly and deftly slides the thermometer in your ass. You flinch slightly, not from pain, but pleasure. The Doctor slowly slides the thermometer up and down in your ass, you find the sensation very pleasant feeling. As she does, you feel your excitement growing.'
-
+						'You obediently roll over and spread your ass cheeks as Ninel lubricates your anus thoroughly and deftly slides the thermometer into your ass. You flinch slightly, not from pain, but pleasure, as she slowly slides the thermometer in and out of your ass. As she does, you feel your excitement growing and your pussy getting wet.'
 						anal_slip += 8
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub', 'lesbian'
 						gs 'stat'
 						
 						if pcs_horny >= 50:
 							act 'Moan with pleasure':
-								cla
-								*clr
+								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
-								'The Doctor pulls the thermometer out of your ass and checks.'
-								'She makes a tsking sound and shaking her head. "39.2 Very bad. Please turn over on your back, I will need to palpate the lymph nodes."'
+								'She pulls the thermometer out of your ass and tuts while shaking her head. "39.2. Very bad. Please turn over on your back. I need to palpate the lymph nodes."'
 
 								act 'Roll back over':
-									cls
-									gs 'stat'
+									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom5.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor began to stroke and knead your stomach and thighs. You are not so sure that this is a medical procedure, she seems take too long and is to tender, but it feels very nice and you do not object.'
-									'Your excitement, meanwhile is growing, you feel your pussy moisten, as you begin to moan sweetly.'
-
+									'You roll back over and she strokes and kneads your stomach and thighs. You''re not so sure if this is an actual medical procedure since she seems to take too long and is too tender, but it feels very nice and you do not object.'
+									'Your excitement is growing and you feel your pussy moisten as you moan sweetly.'
 									gs 'arousal', 'massage', 15, 'lesbian'
 									gs 'stat'
 									
 									act 'Blush with embarrassment':
-										cls
-										gs 'stat'
+										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom6.jpg"></center>'
-										'You blush with embarrassment, but doctors hands work their way down to your pussy as she begins to caress your pussy.'
-										'"Doctor, what are you doing!" You feel embarrassed, outraged and frightened at the same time.'
-										'"Masturbating you, silly. I feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my healing powers on you." She says as she continues to caress your clitoris'
-										'"So you''re a magician, too?"'
-										'"Yes, only mine is a special kind of magic, Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
-										'Shaking your head. "No, I do not think so."'
-										'"It''s magic, based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only while I''m having sex."'
-										'"So?"'
-										'Since you have not asked her to stop she keeps caressing your clitoris. "That is, if we have sex, I can heal you, if you agree of course. Do you agree?"'
-										'"And what do you get in return?"'
-										'"Nothing, I''m doing this solely for my own satisfaction. You see I can only cast if I having an orgasm."'
+										'You blush with embarrassment, but the doctor''s hands work their way down to your pussy.'
+										'"Doctor, what are you doing?!" You feel embarrassed, outraged and frightened at the same time.'
+										'"Masturbating you, silly. I feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my healing powers on you," she says as she continues to caress your clitoris.'
+										'"So you''re a succubus too?!"'
+										'"Yes, only mine is a special kind of magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
+										'You shake your head. "No, I don''t think so..."'
+										'"It''s magic based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only while I''m having sex."'
+										'"So?" you ask.'
+										'Since you haven''t asked her to stop, she keeps caressing your clitoris. "That is, if we have sex, I can heal you, if you agree of course. Do you agree?"'
+										'"And what should I do in return?"'
+										'"Nothing. I''m doing this solely for my own satisfaction."'
 										'Feeling your arousal mounting you find yourself nodding your head. "Then I agree."'
-
 										gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 15, 'lesbian'
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
 										gs 'stat'
 										
-										act 'Agree':gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
+										act 'Agree': gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
 									end
 								end
 							end
 						end
 
 						act 'Indignant':
-							cla
-							*clr
+							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
-							'Feeling confused. "Doctor, what are you doing?"'
-							'She slides the thermometer out of your ass and calmly replies.'
-							'"Your temperature is 39.2, that is very bad."'
+							'You''re starting to feel confused. "Doctor, what are you doing?"'
+							'She slides the thermometer out of your ass. "Your temperature is 39.2. Very bad," she calmly replies.'
 
 							if sick < 48:
 								act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
 									cla
 									'Your voice shakes slightly with fear. "Doctor, what''s wrong with me?"'
-									'"You really do have the flu. Now I''ll give you an injection of antibiotic and antipyretic, it should make you feel better soon. Now roll back over so I can give you, your shot."'
+									'"You really do have the flu. Now I''ll give you an injection of antibiotic and antipyretic which should make you feel better soon. Now roll back over so I can give you your shot."'
 
-									act 'Lie on your stomach and bare ass':
-										cls
+									act 'Lie on your stomach':
+										*clr & cla
 										minut += 10
 										sick -= 2
 										lekar += 3
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom4.jpg"></center>'
-										'Once you roll back over the doctor gives you an injection in the butt, you wince slightly in pain.'
-										'She gives you a slight reassuring pat."We are just about done with everything. I prescribing you lots of bed rest, hot drinks, antibiotics, nose drops and a balanced diet. When the temperature drops, make an appointment at the clinic for a followup."'
-										'You nod."Thank you Doctor."'
-										'The Doctor gets up. "Goodbye <<$pcs_nickname>>, get lots of rest." Then she leaves.'
+										'Once you roll back over, Ninel gives you an injection in the ass and you wince slightly in pain.'
+										'She gives you a slight reassuring pat. "We''re just about done with everything. I''m prescribing you lots of bed rest, hot drinks, antibiotics, nose drops and a balanced diet. When your temperature drops, make an appointment at the clinic for a follow-up."'
+										'You nod. "Thank you, Doctor."'
+										'She gets up. "Goodbye, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Get lots of rest," she says before leaving.'
 
-										act 'Back to bed':gt 'bedr'
+										act 'Back to bed': gt 'bedr'
 									end
 								end
 							elseif sick >= 48:
 								act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
 									cla
 									'Your voice shakes slightly with fear. "Doctor, what''s wrong with me?"'
-									'She shakes her head sadly. "I''m afraid that you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you to check yourself in."'
-									'"What in the hospital, or something?"'
-									'She nods her head yes. "Yes"'
+									'She shakes her head. "I''m afraid that you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you to check yourself in."'
+									'"What, in the hospital or something?"'
+									'She nods her head. "Yes."'
 
 									act 'Agree':
 										cla
-										'You start crying and coughing. "If you think I really need to."'
-										'"I''m afraid so, this is a serious disease. But do not worry, we have a wonderful hospital."'
-										'Nodding you agree. "Ok, if I need to go."'
+										'You start crying and coughing. "If you think I really need to..."'
+										'"I''m afraid so. This is a serious disease."'
+										'You nod. "Okay, if I need to go..."'
 
 										act 'Go to hospital':
 											cla
-											*clr
 											minut += 120
 											gt 'city_clinic', 'drPP'
 										end
 									end
 
 									act 'Don''t want to go':
-										cla
-										*clr
-										'You start crying and coughing. "Oh, Doctor, I do not want to go to the hospital."'
-										'She frowns slightly then looks thoughtful. "Well, I guess we could try an out patient treatment. In that case I will need to give you a couple of shots, to start with."'
-										'You stop crying and smile to her. "Oh, thank you, doctor!"'
+										*clr & cla
+										'You start crying and coughing. "I don''t want to go to the hospital!"'
+										'She frowns slightly, then looks thoughtful. "Well, I guess we could try an outpatient treatment. In that case, I''ll need to give you a few shots to start with."'
+										'You stop crying and smile at her. "Oh, thank you, doctor!"'
 
-										act 'Lie on your stomach and bare ass':
-											cls
+										act 'Lie on your stomach':
+											*clr & cla
 											minut += 15
 											pcs_horny = 100
 											gs 'stat'
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom9.jpg"></center>'
-											'The doctor gives you a couple of shot in your butt cheek, you find yourself suddenly becoming incredible sexual aroused. Between your thighs you feel your pussy become soaked and aching to be invaded. You breath quickens and your nipples grow hard with desire.'
-											'Embarrassed and in a state of panic. "Doctor, what''s happening?" You practically moan out the words'
-											'She nods knowingly. "Yeah! I knew it. I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my powers to heal you."'
-											'"So you''re a magician, too?"'
-											'"Yes, only mine is a special kind of magic, Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
-											'Shaking your head. "No, I do not think so."'
-											'"It''s magic, based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only while I''m having sex."'
-											'"So?"'
-											'"That is, if we have sex, so I can heal you, if you agree of course. Do you agree?"'
-											'"And what do you get in return?"'
-											'"Nothing, I''m doing this solely for my own satisfaction. You see I can only cast if I''m having an orgasm."'
-											'Feeling your arousal mounting you find yourself nodding your head. "Then I agree."'
-
-											act 'Agree':gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
+											'She gives you a few shots in the ass and you find yourself suddenly becoming incredibly aroused, your pussy growing wet and aching to be invaded as your breath quickens and your nipples grow hard with desire.'
+											'"Doctor, what''s happening?!" You practically moan out the words.'
+											'She nods knowingly. "I knew it! I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my powers to heal you!"'
+											'"So you''re a succubus too?!"'
+											'"Yes, only mine is a special kind of magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
+											'You shake your head. "No, I don''t think so..."'
+											'"It''s magic based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only while I''m having sex."'
+											'"So?" you ask.'
+											'"That is, if we have sex, I can heal you, if you agree of course. Do you agree?"'
+											'"And what should I do in return?"'
+											'"Nothing. I''m doing this solely for my own satisfaction."'
+											'Feeling your arousal mounting, you find yourself nodding your head. "Then I agree."'
+
+											act 'Agree': gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
 										end
 									end
 								end
@@ -198,113 +176,95 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel0':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel1':
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel10.jpg"></center>'
-	'Thankfully you left the door unlocked, so you wouldn''t have to get up again. When the doorbell rang, you hoarsely shouted:'
-	'"It''s open! I''m in the bedroom!" You yell as you start coughing.'
-	'A pretty young girl carrying a doctors bag walks into your bedroom and stops beside the bed, carefully considering you.'
-	'You look at her and realize she must be the doctor. "Hello, doctor"'
-	'She smiles at you. "Hello. My name is Ninel P. I am the new local doctor. You called for a doctor?"'
-	'Nodding. "That would be me."'
-	'She nods. "I Understand. What are your symptoms <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?"'
+	'Thankfully, you left the door unlocked so you wouldn''t have to get up again. When the doorbell rings, you hoarsely shout "It''s open! I''m in the bedroom!"'
+	'A pretty young girl carrying a medical bag walks into your bedroom and stops beside the bed, carefully looking you over.'
+	'She smiles at you. "Hello. My name is Ninel Pavlovna, and I''m the new local doctor. I assume you''re the patient?"'
+	'"Yes, that''s me."'
+	'She nods. "I see. What are your symptoms, <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?"'
 
 	act 'Complain':
-		cla
-		*clr
+		*clr & cla
 		ninelmet = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel11.jpg"></center>'
-		'You nod yes. "Of course, Doctor, I think I have the flu. My coughs are just killing me, making my throat very sore, and I think I have a fever too."'
+		'You nod. "Of course, Doctor. I think I have the flu. My coughs are just killing me, making my throat very sore, and I think I have a fever too."'
 		'She feels your forehead. "Runny nose? Headaches? Aching body?"'
-		'You nod."Yes and sneezing!"'
-		'The doctor sits down on the edge of your bed and takes your arm by the wrist, feeling your pulse.'
-		'For a moment you thought you felt power emanating from her fingers, but decide your fever was making you imagine it.'
-		'She looks at you. "Now undress please so I can examine you.'
+		'You nod. "Yes. And sneezing!"'
+		'She sits on the edge of your bed and takes your arm by the wrist, feeling your pulse.'
+		'For a moment, you think you feel power emanating from her fingers, but decide your fever is making you imagine it.'
+		'She looks at you. "Undress so I can examine you please."'
 
 		act 'Undress':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			pcs_horny += 10
-			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel12.jpg"></center>'
-			'You get undressed, once your naked the doctor listens to your lungs with a stethoscope, for a long time. Her hands feel cool and gentle as they touch and caress your skin as she uses the stethoscope.'
-			'As she listens. "Yes, wheezing. Now open your mouth."'
+			'Once you''re undressed, Ninel listens to your lungs with a stethoscope, her hands feeling cool and gentle as they touch and caress your skin.' 
+			'"Yes, wheezing. Now open your mouth."'
 
 			act 'Open your mouth':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel03.jpg"></center>'
-				'You opened your mouth and the doctor examines your sore throat.'
-				'She uses a tongue depressor to look in your mouth. "Hmmm... your throat is very red and inflamed. Now we need to take your temperature."'
+				'You open your mouth and she examines your sore throat.'
+				'She uses a tongue depressor to look in your mouth. "Hmmm... Your throat is very red and inflamed. Now I need to take your temperature."'
 
 				act 'Let her take your temperature':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel04.jpg"></center>'
-					'You keep your mouth open for the thermometer.'
-					'The doctor shakes her head no. "No, not orally. For a more accurate reading we need to take your temperature rectally."'
-					'Your eyes widen with surprise and you blush slightly. "Uh-uh."'
-					'The doctor smiles reassuringly to you. "Do not be embarrassed or afraid, <<$pcs_nickname>>, is not painful."'
-					'You hesitate a moment. "Well if you''re sure."'
-					'The doctor pats your shoulder. "I''m sure. Now lie down and roll over onto your stomach. Then I will need you to use your hands to spread buttocks."'
-
-					act 'Roll over and show ass':
-						cls
-						gs 'stat'
+					'You keep your mouth open for the thermometer, but she shakes her head. "No, not orally. For a more accurate reading, we need to take your temperature rectally."'
+					'Your eyes widen with surprise and you blush slightly. "Oh."'
+					'She smiles reassuringly at you. "Don''t be embarrassed or afraid, <<$pcs_nickname>>. It''s not painful."'
+					'You hesitate. "Well, if you''re sure..."'
+					'She pats your shoulder. "I''m sure. Now lie down and roll over onto your stomach. I''ll need you to use your hands to spread your buttocks."'
+
+					act 'Roll over':
+						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/rectaltemp.jpg"></center>'
-						'You obediently roll over and spread ass cheeks with your hands. The Doctor lubricates your anus thoroughly and deftly slides the thermometer in your ass. You flinch slightly, not from pain, but pleasure. The Doctor slowly slides the thermometer up and down in your ass, you find the sensation very pleasant feeling. As she does, you feel your excitement growing and pussy getting wet.'
-						'Yet again for a moment you thought you felt power emanating from her fingers.'
-
+						'You obediently roll over and spread your ass cheeks with your hands as Ninel lubricates your anus thoroughly and deftly slides the thermometer into your ass. You flinch slightly, not from pain, but pleasure, as she slowly slides the thermometer in and out of your ass. As she does, you feel your excitement growing and your pussy getting wet.'
+						'Again, you swear that you feel power emanating from her fingers.'
 						anal_slip += 8
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal', 10, 'sub', 'lesbian'
 						gs 'stat'
 						
 						act 'Doctor, what''s happening?':
-							cls
-							gs 'stat'
+							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel13.jpg"></center>'
-							'Ninel lies down next to you and starts to kiss and caress your naked body. You feel confused and horrified by her behavior, but she is so gentle. Your body responds to her kisses and caressing, your nipples growing hard and your pussy becoming soaking wet. You are to excited to resist. The only thing that you manage is to moan out.'
+							'Ninel lies down next to you and starts to kiss and caress your naked body. You feel confused and horrified by her behavior, but she''s so gentle. Your body responds to her kisses and caressing, your nipples growing hard and your pussy becoming soaking wet. You''re too excited to resist and moan out in pleasure.'
 							'"Doctor, what are you doing? What''s going on?"'
-							'She nods knowingly. "Yeah! I knew it. I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my powers to heal you."'
-							'"So you''re a magician, too?"'
-							'"Yes, only mine is a special kind of magic, Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
-							'Shaking your head. "No, I do not think so."'
-							'"It''s magic, based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only while I''m having sex."'
-							'"So?"'
+							'She nods knowingly. "I knew it! I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my powers to heal you!"'
+							'"So you''re a succubus too?!"'
+							'"Yes, only mine is a special kind of magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
+							'Shaking your head. "No, I don''t think so..."'
+							'"It''s magic based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can cast only while I''m having sex."'
+							'"So?" you ask.'
 							'"That is, if we have sex, I can heal you, if you agree of course. Do you agree?"'
-							'"And what do you get in return?"'
-							'"Nothing, I''m doing this solely for my own satisfaction. You see I can only cast if I have an orgasm."'
-							'Feeling your arousal mounting you find yourself nodding your head. "Then I agree."'
-
+							'"And what should I do in return?"'
+							'"Nothing. I''m doing this solely for my own satisfaction."'
+							'Feeling your arousal mounting, you find yourself nodding your head. "Then I agree."'
 							gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 10, 'lesbian'
 							gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 10, 'lesbian'
 							minut -= 10
 							gs 'stat'
 						
 							act 'Agree':
-								cls
-								gs 'stat'
+								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel14.jpg"></center>'
-								'Ninel opens her blouse, exposing beautiful breasts, her nipples already hard. You realize she is just as aroused as you.'
-								'She caresses your breasts with her hands. Then she lowers her mouth to your breast, her lips closing around your nipple as she starts to suck on your nipple. You moan softly as your arousal grows ever stronger.'
-								'Ninel slides her hand down your stomach and between your thighs, her fingers begin to caress your clitoris. After a few minutes she slips her fingers inside your pussy, fucking you with her fingers. As you moan in pleasure.'
-
+								'Ninel opens her blouse, exposing her breasts, her nipples already hard. You realize she''s just as aroused as you.'
+								'She caresses your breasts with her hands, then lowers her mouth to your breast and starts sucking on your nipple. You moan softly as your arousal grows even stronger.'
+								'Ninel slides her hand down your stomach and between your thighs, her fingers caressing your clitoris. After a few minutes, she slips her fingers inside your pussy as you moan in pleasure.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 10, 'lesbian'
 								gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 10, 'lesbian'
 								minut -= 10
 								gs 'stat'
 							
 								act 'Enjoy':
-									cls
-									gs 'stat'
+									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel15.jpg"></center>'
-									'You moan under the caressing of her lips and fingers. "Oh God! That feels amazing." She slides her body down along slide yours, her tongue trailing down your skin.'
-									'As her head reaches your waist she crawls between you legs, moments later you can feel her tongue lapping at you soaking wet pussy, then her tongue beings to explore inside of your wet depths.'
-									'As your arousal peaks, you feel yourself screaming in ecstasy, your body trembling as wave after wave of pleasure rips through your body, your orgasms come so hard and fast you can barely catch your breath.'
-									'You moan. "Ah, Ah, yes! More, more-oh-oh-oh! Oh god yes!"'
-
+									'You moan under the caressing sensation of her lips and fingers, she slides her body down alongslide yours, her tongue trailing down your skin.'
+									'As her head reaches your waist, she crawls between your legs and you feel her tongue lapping at your soaking wet pussy seconds later before her tongue starts exploring inside your wet depths.'
+									'As your arousal peaks, you feel yourself screaming in ecstasy, your body trembling as wave after wave of pleasure rips through your body, your orgasms come so hard and fast you can barely catch your breath. "Ah, Ah, yes! More, more-oh-oh-oh! Oh god yes!"'
 									$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 									gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 10, 'lesbian'
 									gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
@@ -312,42 +272,37 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel1':
 									gs 'stat'
 							
 									act 'Change position':
-										cls
-										gs 'stat'
+										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel16.jpg"></center>'
-										'As your orgasm wrack your body, Ninel crawls forward and straddles your stomach as she leans forward. Her hand going back to your crotch as her fingers plunge back into your wet depths. You can feel her pussy juices flowing down her thighs and onto your stomach. You groan, as your hands ecstatically squeeze her butt checks, holding onto her tightly.'
-										'Ninel fingers plunge in and out of your pussy frantically, her own breath coming in short gasps now.'
-										'"Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, <<$pcs_nickname>>!"She exhales. "I want to feel your fingers in me!'
-
+										'As your orgasm wracks your body, Ninel crawls forward and straddles your stomach as she leans forward and her fingers plunge back into your wet depths. You can feel her pussy juices flowing down her thighs and onto your stomach. You groan as your hands ecstatically squeeze her ass, holding onto her tightly.'
+										'Her fingers frantically plunge in and out of your pussy, her own breath coming in short gasps now.'
+										'"Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>!" she exhales. "I want to feel your fingers in me!'
 										gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 10, 'lesbian'
 										gs 'stat'
 									
-										act 'Caress Ninel':
-											cla
-											*clr
+										act 'Caress her':
+											*clr & cla
 											ninelsex += 1
 											'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel17.jpg"></center>'
-											'You crawl out from under her, leaving her on all fours. Both of your hands seek out her wet pussy, at first rubbing her clit and lips, then a couple of your fingers slide inside of her pussy as you being to finger fuck her. While your other hand slides up to her asshole, leaving a trail of wetness from you soaking wet fingers. After only a moment you slide one of those fingers into her ass. Now your finger fucking both her ass and pussy with your hands.'
-											'She screams in ecstasy, her muscles clench and tighten on your fingers. You begin to furiously finger fuck Ninel adding a third finger inside of her pussy and a second inside of her ass, while she squirms under you pleading'
-											'"Please do not stop! That''s it! Yes, ah! Oh yeah, ah!"'
-
+											'You crawl out from under her, leaving her on all fours. Your fingers seek out her wet pussy, rubbing her clit and lips before sliding inside her pussy. You start finger fucking her while your other hand slides up to her asshole, leaving a trail of wetness from your soaking wet fingers. You then slide your finger into her ass.'
+											'She screams in ecstasy, her muscles clenching and tightening around your fingers as you furiously finger fuck her, adding a third finger inside her pussy and a second inside her ass as she squirms under you.'
+											'"Please don''t stop! Yes! Oh yeah!"'
 											gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 											gs 'arousal', 'anal_finger_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 											minut -= 10
 											gs 'stat'
 											
 											act 'Orgasm':
-												cls
-												if ninelsex = 1:girl += 1
+												*clr & cla
+												if ninelsex = 1: girl += 1
 												sick = 0
 												pcs_health = pcs_vital * 10 + pcs_stren * 5 + 1000
 												pcs_mood = 100
 												gs 'stat'
 												'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel18.jpg"></center>'
-												'You feel that your about to explode again, Ninel seems to sense this, turning she pushes you down on your back. She straddles your face as she leans forward to bury her face in your crotch again.'
-												'Without hesitation, you plunge your fingers deep inside of her again and begin to furiously finger fuck her again. While Ninel uses her tongue to lap at your swollen clit and slip inside your pussy, flicking her tongue around inside of you. Within moments her body shakes and spasms, your finger and hand becomes soaked. Her juices flow down her inner thighs and even drip on your face. While she buries her tongue as deeply inside of you, as it will go.'
-												'You have a feeling of ecstasy so powerful it overwhelms you leaving you stunned at the sheer intensity of your orgasm. You shout and wither against the almost unbearable pleasure and it goes on and on seemingly without end. You feel like you are about to pass out when it almost mercifully it passes.'
-
+												'You feel like you''re about to explode again and Ninel seems to sense this, turning around and pushing you down on your back. She straddles your face as she leans forward to bury her face in your crotch again.'
+												'Without hesitation, you plunge your fingers deep inside her again while Ninel uses her tongue to lap at your swollen clit before slipping it back inside your pussy, flicking her tongue around inside of you. Within seconds, her body shakes and spasms as her juices flow down her inner thighs and drip on your face while she buries her tongue as deeply inside you as it will go.'
+												'You have a feeling of ecstasy so powerful it overwhelms you, leaving you stunned at the sheer intensity of your orgasm. You shout and wither against the almost unbearable pleasure and it goes on and on, seemingly without end. You feel like you''re about to pass out when it almost mercifully passes.'
 												$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 												gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 												gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
@@ -355,22 +310,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel1':
 												gs 'stat'
 												
 												act 'Lie exhausted':
-													cla
-													*clr
+													*clr & cla
 													minut += 30
-													clr
 													gs 'stat'
 													'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel19.jpg"></center>'
-													'You lay there panting, sweating and exhausted on your bed. Ninel snuggles as the two of you share a gentle kiss.'
-													'She looks at you. "Well, how do you feel?"'
-													'Unable to resist grinning. "Ooh, Just perfect" You answer and only then do you realize just how well you do feel. The sickness seems to have passed and you feel perfectly healthy, not to mention in a wonderful mood. The sweet bouquet of sex drifts in the air and the exhaustion makes this an even more pleasant sensations.'
-													'She smiles at you. "Well, It''s magic, baby. Mm-m, you''re just a miracle. For a long time I have not gotten so much pleasure from my magic. If you get sick again, just call me or if you just want to spend time with me. You can also look for me in the clinic.'
-													'You promised to be sure to find her, closing your eyes falling asleep. While you were sleeping, Ninel quietly dressed and left.'
-
+													'You lay panting, sweating and exhausted on your bed. Ninel snuggles as the two of you share a gentle kiss.'
+													'She looks at you. "Well? How do you feel?"'
+													'"Ooohh. Perfect..." you answer and only then do you realize just how well you do feel. The sickness seems to have passed and you feel perfectly healthy, not to mention the wonderful mood you''re suddenly in. The sweet bouquet of sex drifts in the air and the exhaustion makes this an even more pleasant sensation.'
+													'She smiles at you. "Well, It''s magic, baby. Mm-m, you''re just a miracle. I''ve haven''t recieved so much pleasure from my magic in a long time. If you get sick again, just call me. You can also look for me in the clinic if you just want to see me.'
+													'You close your eyes and fall asleep as Ninel quietly gets dressed.'
 													gs 'arousal', 'end'
 													gs 'stat'
 													
-													act 'Sleep':gt 'bed2'
+													act 'Sleep': gt 'bed2'
 												end
 											end
 										end
@@ -386,69 +338,61 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel1':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel2':
-	cls
+	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel13.jpg"></center>'
-	'Ninel lies down next to you and starts to kiss and caress your naked body. You feel confused and horrified by her behavior, but she was so gentle. Your body responds to her kisses and caresses, your nipples grow hard and your pussy becomes soaking wet. You are too excited to resist.'
-
+	'Ninel lies down next to you and starts to kiss and caress your naked body. You feel confused and horrified by her behavior, but she''s so gentle. Your body responds to her kisses and caresses, your nipples grow hard and your pussy grows wet. You''re too excited to resist...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 10, 'lesbian'
 	gs 'stat'
 	
 	act 'Surrender to your arousal':
-		cls
+		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel14.jpg"></center>'
-		'Ninel opens her blouse, exposing beautiful breasts, her nipples already hard. You realize she is just as aroused as you.'
-		'She caresses your breasts with her hands. Then she lowers her mouth to your breast, her lips closing around you nipple as she starts to suck your nipple. You moan softly as you arousal grows ever stronger.'
-		'Ninel slides her hand down your stomach and between your thighs, her fingers begin to caress your clitoris. After a few minutes she slips her fingers inside of your pussy, fucking you with her fingers. As you moan in pleasure.'
-
+		'Ninel opens her blouse, exposing her breasts, her nipples already hard. You realize she''s just as aroused as you.'
+		'She caresses your breasts with her hands, then lowers her mouth to your breast and starts sucking on your nipple. You moan softly as your arousal grows even stronger.'
+		'Ninel slides her hand down your stomach and between your thighs, her fingers caressing your clitoris. After a few minutes, she slips her fingers inside your pussy as you moan in pleasure.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 10, 'lesbian'
 		gs 'stat'
 		
 		act 'Enjoy':
-			cls
+			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel15.jpg"></center>'
-			'You moan under the caressing of her lips and fingers. "Oh God! That feels amazing." She slides her body down along slide yours, her tongue trailing down your skin.'
-			'As her head reaches your waist she crawls between you legs, moments later you can feel her tongue lapping at you soaking wet pussy and then her tongue beings to explore inside of your wet depths.'
-			'As your arousal moments, you feel yourself screaming in ecstasy, your body trembling as wave after wave of pleasure rips through your body, your orgasms come so hard and fast you can barely catch your breath.'
-			'You moan. "Ah, Ah, yes! More, more-oh-oh-oh! Oh god yes!"'
-
+			'You moan under the caressing of her lips and fingers. "Oh god, that feels amazing!" She slides her body down alongside yours, her tongue trailing down your skin.'
+			'As her head reaches your waist, she crawls between your legs and you feel her tongue lapping at your soaking wet pussy before it starts exploring inside your wet depths.'
+			'As your arousal grows, you feel yourself screaming in ecstasy, your body trembling as wave after wave of pleasure rips through you, your orgasms coming so hard and fast that you can barely catch your breath. "Ah, ah, yes! More, more-oh-oh-oh! Oh god yes!"'
 			gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
 			gs 'stat'
-									
+		
 			act 'Change position':
-				cls
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel16.jpg"></center>'
-				'As an orgasm wracks your body, Ninel crawls forward and straddles your stomach, she leans forward. Her hand going back to your crotch as her fingers plunge back into your wet depths. You can feel her pussy juices flowing down her thighs onto your stomach. You groan, as your hands ecstatically squeeze her butt checks, holding onto her tightly.'
-				'Ninel fingers plunge in and out of your pussy frantically, her own breath coming in short gasps now.'
-				'"Oh, <<$pcs_nickname>>, <<$pcs_nickname>>!"She exhales. "I want to feel your fingers in me!'
-
+				'As an orgasm wracks your body, Ninel crawls forward and straddles your stomach. She leans forward and her hand slides down to your crotch as her fingers plunge back into your wet depths. You can feel her pussy juices flowing down her thighs onto your stomach. You groan as your hands ecstatically squeeze her ass, holding onto her tightly.'
+				'Ninel fingers frantically plunge in and out of your pussy, her own breath coming in short gasps now.'
+				'"Oh <<$pcs_nickname>>!" She exhales. "I want to feel your fingers in me!"'
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger', 10, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
-									
+			
 				act 'Return the favor':
-					cls
+					*clr & cla
 					ninelsex += 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel17.jpg"></center>'
-					'You crawl out from under her, leaving her on all fours. Both of your hands seek out her wet pussy, at first rubbing her clit and lips, then couple of your fingers slide inside of her pussy as you being to finger fuck her. While your other hand slides up to her asshole, leaving a trail of wetness from you soaking wet fingers. After only a moment you slide one of those fingers into her asshole. Now your finger fucking both her ass and pussy with your hands.'
-					'She screams in ecstasy, her muscles clench and tighten on your fingers. You begin to furiously finger fuck Ninel adding a third finger inside of her pussy and a second inside of her ass, while she squirms under you, pleading'
-					'"Please do not stop! That''s it! Yes, ah! Oh yeah, ah!"'
-
+					'You crawl out from under her, leaving her on all fours. Your fingers seek out her wet pussy, rubbing her clit and lips before sliding inside her pussy. You start finger fucking her while your other hand slides up to her asshole, leaving a trail of wetness from your soaking wet fingers. You then slide your finger into her ass.'
+					'She screams in ecstasy, her muscles clenching and tightening around your fingers as you furiously finger fuck her, adding a third finger inside her pussy and a second inside her ass as she squirms under you.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 					gs 'arousal', 'anal_finger_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 					minut -= 10
 					gs 'stat'
-									
-					act 'orgasm':
-						cls
+				
+					act 'Orgasm':
+						*clr & cla
 						if ninelsex = 1:girl += 1
 						sick = 0
 						pcs_health = pcs_vital * 10 + pcs_stren * 5 + 1000
 						pcs_mood = 100
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel18.jpg"></center>'
-						'You feel yourself about to explode again, Ninel seems to sense this, turning she pushes you down on your back. She straddles your face as she leans forward to bury her face in your crotch again.'
-						'Without hesitation, you plunge your fingers deep inside of her again and begin to furiously finger fuck her again. While Ninel uses her tongue to lap at your swollen clit and slip inside your pussy, flicking around inside of you. Within moments her body shakes and spasms, your finger and hand becomes soaked. Her juices flow down her inner thighs and even drip on your face. While she buries her tongue as deeply inside of you as it will go.'
-						'You have a feeling of intense ecstasy so powerful it leaves you stunned, at the sheer intensity of your orgasm. You shout and wither against the almost unbearable pleasure, it goes on and on seemingly without end. You feel like you are about to pass out when it almost mercifully it passes.'
-
+						'You feel like you''re about to explode again and Ninel seems to sense this, turning around and pushing you down on your back. She straddles your face as she leans forward to bury her face in your crotch again.'
+						'Without hesitation, you plunge your fingers deep inside her again while Ninel uses her tongue to lap at your swollen clit before slipping it back inside your pussy, flicking her tongue around inside of you. Within seconds, her body shakes and spasms as her juices flow down her inner thighs and drip on your face while she buries her tongue as deeply inside you as it will go.'
+						'You have a feeling of ecstasy so powerful it overwhelms you, leaving you stunned at the sheer intensity of your orgasm. You shout and wither against the almost unbearable pleasure and it goes on and on, seemingly without end. You feel like you''re about to pass out when it almost mercifully passes.'
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_finger_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 						gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
@@ -456,19 +400,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel2':
 						gs 'stat'
 						
 						act 'Lie exhausted':
-							cls
+							*clr & cla
 							minut += 30
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel19.jpg"></center>'
-							'You lay there panting, sweating and exhausted on your bed. Ninel snuggles as the two of you share gentle kiss.'
-							'She looks at you. "Well, how do you feel?"'
-							'Unable to resist grinning. "Ooh... Just perfect" You answer and only then do you realize just how well you do feel. The sickness seems to have passed, leaving you feeling perfectly healthy and in a wonderful mood. The sweet bouquet of sex hangs in the air and the exhaustion makes this an even more pleasant sensations.'
-							'She smiles at you. "Well, It''s magic, baby. Mm-m, you''re just a miracle. For a long time I have not gotten so much pleasure from my magic. If you get sick again, just call me or if you just want to spend time with me. You can also look for me in the clinic.'
-							'You promised to be sure to find her, closing your eyes falling asleep. While you were sleeping, Ninel quietly dressed and left.'
-
+							'You lay panting, sweating and exhausted on your bed. Ninel snuggles as the two of you share a gentle kiss.'
+							'She looks at you. "Well? How do you feel?"'
+							'"Ooohh. Perfect..." you answer and only then do you realize just how well you do feel. The sickness seems to have passed and you feel perfectly healthy, not to mention the wonderful mood you''re suddenly in. The sweet bouquet of sex drifts in the air and the exhaustion makes this an even more pleasant sensation.'
+							'She smiles at you. "Well, It''s magic, baby. Mm-m, you''re just a miracle. I''ve haven''t recieved so much pleasure from my magic in a long time. If you get sick again, just call me. You can also look for me in the clinic if you just want to see me.'
+							'You close your eyes and fall asleep as Ninel quietly gets dressed.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'end'
 							gs 'stat'
 							
-							act 'Sleep':gt 'bedr'
+							act 'Sleep': gt 'bedr'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -478,108 +421,95 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel2':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel3':
-	cls
-	gs 'stat'
+	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel20.jpg"></center>'
-	'You lie in bed quietly waiting for Ninel, your fingers rub your pussy, preparing yourself for her visit, so when the doorbell rings your pussy is already soaking wet and ready.'
-
+	'You lie in bed quietly waiting for Ninel, your fingers rubbing your pussy as you prepare yourself for her visit. When the doorbell rings, your pussy is soaking wet and ready.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 10
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	act 'Come in it''s open!':
-		cla
-		*clr
+	act 'It''s open!':
+		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel21.jpg"></center>'
-		'When you hear the doorbell you shout. "Come, I mean it''s open!" Wheezing your throat sore, Ninel enters the room.'
-		'"Hi, <<$pcs_nickname>>. Sick again?"'
+		'When you hear the doorbell, you shout "It''s open!" Your throat sore is wheezing as Ninel enters the room.'
+		'"Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>. Sick again?"'
 		'You cough. "Yeah, can you use your magic again?"'
 		'"Sure, baby. Undress and let me examine you."'
-		'"Why? You''re a magician"'
-		'She laughs. "Silly. How could you know this little about magic. I need to know what I need to treat you for, otherwise it will happen as the old song says. Try to make a thunderstorm and get a goat. Magic must be precise."'
-		'"Oh, well ok."'
+		'"Why? You''re a magician."'
+		'She laughs. "Silly. How could you know this little about magic. I need to know what I need to treat you for, otherwise it will happen as the old song says. ''Try to make a thunderstorm and get a goat.'' Magic must be precise."'
+		'"Oh. Okay..."'
 
 		act 'Undress':
-			cls
+			*clr & cla
 			pcs_horny = 75
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel22.jpg"></center>'
-			'You undress and Ninel listens your lungs with her stethoscope. As usual, her hands are light and gentle while touching you. Her stethoscope on your chest while you feel your body flushing with another kind of heat.'
-			'"Yes. Your wheezing again. Is your temperature high as well?"'
-			'You sneeze. "Yes 39.6."'
+			'You undress and Ninel listens your lungs with her stethoscope. As usual, her hands are light and gentle while touching you. You feel your body flushing with heat.'
+			'"You''re wheezing again. Is your temperature high as well?"'
+			'You sneeze. "Yes. 39.6."'
 			'"Oh, you poor thing."'
 			'You start to roll over to let her take your temperature. "The usual?"'
-			'She shakes her head as she smiles at you. "Well, no. You''re far to excited for a rectal reading. We will have to do it orally this time."'
+			'She shakes her head as she smiles at you. "Well, no. You''re far too excited for a rectal reading. We''ll have to do it orally this time."'
 			'You lay back on your back. "Do you have a different one?"'
-			'She holds up an oral thermometer. "You mean like this one?" She places it in your mouth.'
+			'She holds up an oral thermometer. "You mean like this?" she asks before placing it in your mouth.'
 
 			act 'Taking your temperature':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel23.jpg"></center>'
 				'Ninel pulls the thermometer out of your mouth and looks at it, shaking her head.'
-				'"Yes, it''s bad again. Do not worry I can help."'
+				'"Yes, it''s bad again. Don''t worry, I can help."'
 				'She slowly pulls down your blanket.'
 
-				act 'Unbuttoning her dress':
-					cls
+				act 'Unbutton her dress':
+					*clr & cla
 					pcs_horny = 100
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel24.jpg"></center>'
-					'You can no longer hold back, feeling the blanket slide down your naked skin, you reach up and start unbuttoning her dress.'
-					'Her skilful hands glide over your body slowly.'
-					'"Caress me, I''m burning up! I want you so much!" You breathless whisper.'
-					'Instead she stops and grins. "Tell me how much you want me."'
-					'"Ninel, darling, darling, please caress me! Take me, I''m all yours! I beg you! I beg you!"'
+					'You can no longer hold back. Feeling the blanket slide down your naked skin, you reach up and start unbuttoning her dress.'
+					'Her skilful hands glide slowly over your body. "Caress me, I''m burning up! I want you so much!" you breathless whisper.'
+					'Instead, she stops and grins. "Tell me how much you want me."'
+					'"Ninel, please caress me! Take me, I''m all yours! I beg you! I beg you!"'
 					'She just grins at you. "Beg me more!"'
-					'Your eyes tear up at the lack of her touch. "Please, please, please! I beg you, I beg you, please caress me! I''m dying!"'
+					'Your eyes tear up at the lack of her touch. "Please, please, please! I beg you, please caress me! I''m dying!"'
 
 					act 'Beg and plead':
-						cla
-						*clr
+						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel25.jpg"></center>'
-						'As you beg and plead Ninel final takes pity on you as she consents to your pleas. Leaning down putting her face between your thighs, her tongue darts out and caresses your clit. You moan in pleasure, a few moments later her tongue skillfully slips inside of you.'
-						'You shriek and moan as the heat waves of your sickness diverge from your body. Your pussy is over flowing, Ninel laps it up like a kitten with a bowl of milk.'
-						'You feel yourself nearing climax, when Ninel suddenly interrupts your blissful moment with a hard voice of command. "Now you will appease me!"'
-
+						'As you beg and plead, Ninel finally takes pity on you and consents to your pleas. Leaning down and putting her face between your thighs, her tongue darts out and caresses your clit. You moan in pleasure as her tongue skilfully slips inside you.'
+						'You shriek and moan as the heat waves of your sickness diverge from your body. Your pussy is overflowing as Ninel laps it up like a kitten with a bowl of milk.'
+						'You feel yourself nearing climax when Ninel suddenly interrupts your blissful moment with a hard voice of command. "Now you will appease me!"'
 						gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
 						gs 'stat'
-									
+					
 						act 'Ninel takes control':
-							cla
-							*clr
+							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel26.jpg"></center>'
-							'Ninel lays back on the bed, you crawl over to her and begin to lick her clit. Ninel begins to moan from your tongue lashing you are giving her clit, her pussy oozing out her juices, you eagerly lick up all her juices. As she moans more, she suddenly grabs your hair with her hand and pushes your face into her crotch, your tongue darting inside of her pussy. She grinds you face against her pussy, smearing her juices all over your face and her thighs.'
-							'Ninel moans as she grinds her pussy against your face. "Good, A-ah! Good girl, I''m cuming ah!"'
-
+							'Ninel lays back on the bed as you crawl over to her and start licking her clit. She moans from your tongue lashing you''re giving her clit, her pussy oozing out her juices as you eagerly lap away at it. She then suddenly grabs your hair with her hand and pushes your face into her crotch, your tongue darting inside her pussy as she grinds your face against her crotch, smearing her juices all over your face.'
+							'"Good, A-ah! Good girl. I''m cumming, ah!" she moans loudly.'
 							gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 							gs 'stat'
-									
+						
 							act '69':
-								cla
-								*clr
+								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel27.jpg"></center>'
-								'She pulls you up by your hair and turns you around so you can 69 each other. Your tongue eagerly seeks out her pussy as you both being to explore each others pussies with your tongues, both of you moans and gasps, becoming louder and louder.'
-								'You are getting closer and closer to the peak, and Ninel seems too as well, but then she stops again.'
-								'You beg her. "Please, please, go on! I am about to cum!" You caress her insistently, hoping she will relent, but Ninel strongly pulls herself from you.'
+								'She pulls you up by the hair and turns you around so you can 69 each other. Your tongue eagerly seeks out her pussy as you both explore each other''s pussies with your tongues, both of you moaning and gasping louder.'
+								'You''re getting closer to your peak, and Ninel seems too as well, but then she stops again.'
+								'"Please, please, go on!" you beg. "I''m about to cum!" You caress her insistently, hoping she will relent, but she pulls herself away from you.'
 								'"No! I want you to masturbate yourself."'
-
 								gs 'arousal', 'cuni_give', 10, 'lesbian'
 								gs 'arousal', 'cuni', 10, 'lesbian'
 								minut -= 10
 								gs 'stat'
-									
+							
 								act 'Masturbate':
-									cla
-									*clr
+									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel29.jpg"></center>'
-									'She has you sit on her stomach. With a groan, you obey as you begin to furiously and desperate rub your throbbing pussy. Under you Ninel is doing the same thing. Your pussy is overflowing with its juices, that run down your thighs, down the crack of your ass and onto Ninel''s stomach. The room smells of your juices, languid moans escape both of you as fingers furious work pussies, slowly bringing you to find the peak of bliss again. You scream and squirm in orgasm as does Neiel under you.'
-
+									'She has you sit on her stomach. With a groan, you obey and start furiously and desperately rubbing your throbbing pussy. Ninel is doing the same thing underneath you. The room smells of your juices and lewd moans escape you as you furiously work your pussy, slowly bringing yourself to the peak of bliss again. You scream and squirm in orgasm at the same time as Ninel.'
 									$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 									gs 'arousal', 'clit_finger', 10, 'lesbian'
 									gs 'stat'
 									
 									act 'Lay exhausted':
-										cls
+										*clr & cla
 										minut += 40
 										ninelsex += 1
 										sick = 0
@@ -587,16 +517,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'ninel3':
 										pcs_mood = 100
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sex/ninel28.jpg"></center>'
-										'You lay back against her as her arms come around you, holding you, hugging you tightly to her. Her breath hot against the back of your neck as you pant from exhaustion. Your body slowly recovering from the crushing orgasm.'
-										'You feel completely and totally healthy, but extremely exhausted.'
-										'"Thank you, dear." You say in a whisper.'
-										'"You''re welcome. Come visit me in the clinic sometime.'
-										'You promised to visit her, exhausted reclining on a wet crumpled sheet you fall sleep, Ninel quietly dressed and leaves.'
-
+										'You lay back against her as her arms hold you tightly against her, her breath hot against the back of your neck as you pant from exhaustion.' 
+										'Your body slowly recovers from the crushing orgasm and you feel healthy, but exhausted.'
+										'"Thank you," you whisper.'
+										'"You''re welcome," she replies. "Come visit me in the clinic sometime."'
+										'You promise to visit her and quickly fall asleep as Ninel quietly gets dressed.'
 										gs 'arousal', 'end'
 										gs 'stat'
 										
-										act 'Sleep':gt 'bedr'
+										act 'Sleep': gt 'bedr'
 									end
 								end
 							end

locations/korr.qsrc

@@ -58,12 +58,12 @@ act '<b>Go to the street</b>':
 	end
 end
 
-act 'Go to the bedroom':gt 'bedr'
-act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'vanr'
-act 'Go to the kitchen':gt 'kuhr'
-act 'Go to the living room':gt 'sitr'
+act 'Go to the bedroom': gt 'bedr'
+act 'Go to the bathroom': gt 'vanr'
+act 'Go to the kitchen': gt 'kuhr'
+act 'Go to the living room': gt 'sitr'
 if func('homes_properties', 'is_current_home') = 0:
-	act 'Set this apartment as your main home':gs 'homes_properties', 'set_home' & gt 'korr'
+	act 'Set this apartment as your main home': gs 'homes_properties', 'set_home' & gt 'korr'
 else
 	if $status['dog'] ! 'blocked' and menu_off = 0 and rex['owned'] = 1:
 		if rex['status'] = 0:
@@ -94,10 +94,10 @@ if ParrotQW['Owned1'] = 1:'Your parrot <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$
 if parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 1:
 	parkblackmail = 2
 	parkday = daystart
-	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it, you''re horrified to find several pictures of you giving blowjobs to the guys in the park inside.'
-	'A small note accompanying them says:'
-	'If you don''t want these pictures to be posted on your door and sent to your work place, then come to this address.'
-	'PS, if you don''t come today, these pictures will be hanging in your stairwell tomorrow.'
+	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it, you''re horrified to find several pictures of you giving blowjobs to the guys in the park inside. A small note accompanying them says:'
+	*nl
+	'"If you don''t want these pictures to be posted on your door and sent to your work place, then come to this address. PS, if you don''t come today, these pictures will be hanging in your stairwell tomorrow."'
+	*nl
 	'You check the address and find that it''s Aphrodite Photography in the City Center.'
 elseif parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 2:
 	parkblackmail = 0
@@ -105,7 +105,7 @@ elseif parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 2:
 	'You''re horrifed and embarrassed when you see photos of you with your face covered in cum with two dicks in your mouth covering your stairwell walls.'
 end
 
-!!if rand (0,2) ! 0:gs 'din_bad' & dynamic $mobile_check
+!!if rand (0,2) ! 0: gs 'din_bad' & dynamic $mobile_check
 
 if hour >= 9 and hour <= 20 and santehnikDolg > 0 and money >= santehnikDolg:
 	'<b><font color="red">, the doorbell rings</font></b>'
@@ -122,7 +122,7 @@ if hour >= 9 and hour <= 20 and santehnikDolg > 0 and money >= santehnikDolg:
 			gs 'stat'
 			'You open the door and Grisha smiles. "I thought you were hiding from me. So, do you have my money?" You nod and pay him the money you owe.'
 
-			act 'Close the door':gt $curloc
+			act 'Close the door': gt $curloc
 		end
 	end
 end
@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQWDay'] ! daystart and BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 1 and hour >= 8 and
 				gs 'stat'
 				'You sign the confession and the detective signals for an officer, who enters the room as the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
 
-				act 'Go with him':gt 'kameraKPZ'
+				act 'Go with him': gt 'kameraKPZ'
 			end
 
 			act 'Tell the truth':
@@ -221,7 +221,7 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQWDay'] ! daystart and BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 1 and hour >= 8 and
 				gs 'stat'
 				'You tell the detective what actually happened and how Ilyushkin framed you, but he barely listens to you before he slams his fist on the table and yells at you. "I wasn''t born yesterday! If you will not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" An officer then enters the room and the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
 
-				act 'Go with him':gt 'kameraKPZ'
+				act 'Go with him': gt 'kameraKPZ'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -236,13 +236,11 @@ end
 if sick > 0 and doktorday ! daystart:
 
 	!!act 'Call a doctor':
-	!!	cla
-	!!	*clr
+	!!	*clr & cla
 	!!	minut += 15
 	!!	doktorday = daystart
 	!!	sick -= 5
-
-	!!	if sick < 1:sick = 1
+!!	if sick < 1:sick = 1
 	!!	if sickstage = 1:sicktimer += 5
 
 	!!	'A doctor arrives from the clinic and examines you. After the examination, the doctor gives a shot and you start feeling better.'
@@ -254,95 +252,76 @@ if sick > 0 and doktorday ! daystart:
 end
 
 $ninel0 = {
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel00.jpg"></center>'
-	'You open the door. Standing on the threshold is a pretty young girl with a medical bag in her hand.'
-	'"Hello, my name is Ninel. I do the home visits for the clinic. Where is the patient?"'
+	'You open the door and see a pretty young girl with a medical bag in her hand standing on the threshold.'
+	'"Hello, my name is Ninel Pavlovna. I do the home visits for the clinic. Where is the patient?"'
 	'"That would be me..."'
 	'"I see. First, we need to get you back into bed."'
 
-	act 'Follow the doctor in the bedroom and lay down':
-		cla
-		*clr
+	act 'Go back to bed':
+		*clr & cla
 		ninelmet = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom0.jpg"></center>'
-		'The doctor sits on the edge of your bed and checks your forehead.'
-		'"What are your symptoms <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?"'
-		'"Of course..." You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry. I have a high fever, a sore throat and a cough that''s killing me!"'
+		'Ninel sits on the edge of your bed and checks your forehead.'
+		'"What are your symptoms, <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?"'
+		'"Of course..." You start to answer, but end up coughing. "Sorry. I have a high fever, a sore throat and a cough that''s killing me!"'
 		'"Running nose? Headaches? Aching bones?"'
 		'"Yes, all of them."'
-		'"Well, take your clothes off so I can examine you."'
+		'"Please take your clothes off so I can examine you."'
 
 		act 'Undress':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			pcs_horny += 10
-			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom1.jpg"></center>'
-			'You undress and the doctor listens to your lungs for a long time. Her hands are cool and gentle as she touches you, while the stethoscope is cold.'
-			'"Mmmm, now let''s take a look at your mouth. Open wide and say Aaah."'
+			'You undress and Ninel listens to your lungs for a long time. Her hands are cool and gentle as she touches you, while the stethoscope is cold.'
+			'"Mmmm, now let''s take a look at your mouth. Open wide and say ''aah''."'
 
 			act 'Ahh':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel03.jpg"></center>'
-				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in, examining your sore throat'
+				'You open your mouth and she looks in, examining your sore throat.'
 				'"I see. Your throat is very red and inflamed. Now we need to take your temperature.'
 
 				act 'Put a thermometer in your mouth':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel04.jpg"></center>'
-					'"No, not like that. The temperature needs to be measured rectally.'
+					'"No, not like that. The temperature needs to be measured rectally."'
 					'"What...?"'
 					'"It''s more precise. Don''t be afraid, it''s not painful."'
 					'"Well if I have to..."'
 					'"It''s necessary. Come on, lie down on your stomach and spread your buttocks with your hands please."'
 
 					act 'Change position':
-						cla
-						*clr
-						clr
-						gs 'stat'
+						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom2.jpg"></center>'
-						'You obediently roll over and offer your ass. The doctor lubricates your anus with some vaseline and deftly introduces the thermometer. You flinch, not from pain but pleasure. The doctor doesn''t just stick the thermometer in your ass, but slowly moves it back and forth. It''s very nice and you feel your excitement growing.'
-
+						'You obediently roll over and spread your ass as Ninel lubricates your anus with some vaseline and deftly introduces the thermometer. You flinch, not from pain but pleasure. The doctor doesn''t just stick the thermometer in your ass, but slowly moves it back and forth. It''s very nice and you feel your excitement growing.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10
 						gs 'stat'
 
 						if pcs_horny >= 50:
-							act 'Moan with pleasure':
-								cla
-								*clr
+							act 'Moan in pleasure':
+								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
 								'The doctor takes the thermometer out of your ass and checks it.'
-								'"39.2. Very bad. Please turn on your back, I need to palpate the lymph nodes.'
+								'"39.2. Very bad. Please turn on your back, I need to palpate the lymph nodes."'
 
 								act 'Roll over on your back':
-									cla
-									*clr
-									clr
-									gs 'stat'
+									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom5.jpg"></center>'
 									'The doctor begins to stroke and knead your stomach and thighs. You''re not actually sure if this is a real medical procedure. She does it for far too long, but it''s too pleasant and you don''t object.'
 									'Your excitement continues to grow and you feel your pussy moistening as you start to moan softly.'
-
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 									gs 'stat'
 
 									act 'Blush in embarrassment':
-										cla
-										*clr
-										clr
-
-										gs 'stat'
+										*clr & cla
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom6.jpg"></center>'
-										'You blush with embarrassment, but then fall below the hands of the doctor and she begins to caress your pussy'
+										'You blush with embarrassment, but then fall below the hands of Ninel as she starts caressing your pussy.'
 										'"Doctor, what are you doing!" you scream, feeling embarrassed, outraged and frightened.'
-										'"I feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use his power quietly." she replies.'
+										'"I feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my healing powers on you," she replies.'
 										'"So you''re a succubus too?!"'
 										'"Yes, but only with a special kind of magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?'
 										'"No, I don''t think so..."'
@@ -350,9 +329,8 @@ $ninel0 = {
 										'"So...?"'
 										'"That is, if I have sex with you, I will heal you. So? Do you agree?"'
 										'"And what should I do in return?"'
-										'"Nothing. I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I will see that you only have orgasms if conjured."'
+										'"Nothing. I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction."'
 										'"Then of course I agree."'
-
 										gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 										gs 'stat'
 
@@ -363,32 +341,29 @@ $ninel0 = {
 						end
 
 						act 'Indignant':
-							cla
-							*clr
+							*clr & cla
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
-							'"Doctor, what the hell are you doing?" you squeal.'
-							'She takes the thermometer out of your ass and calmly replies. "I''m measuring your temperature. 39.2, very bad."'
+							'"What the hell are you doing?!" you squeal.'
+							'She takes the thermometer out of your ass. "I''m measuring your temperature. 39.2. Very bad," she calmly replies.'
 
 							act 'What''s wrong with me?':
 								cla
 								'"Doctor, what''s wrong with me?" you ask, somewhat scared.'
-								'"You have a really bad flu, but I''ll make you an injection of antibiotics and antigens. You will soon feel better."'
+								'"You have a really bad flu, but I''ll make you an injection of antibiotics and antigens and you''ll soon feel better."'
 
 								act 'Get injection':
-									cla
-									*clr
+									*clr & cla
 									minut += 10
 									sick -= 2
 									lekar += 3
-									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom4.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor jabs the needle into one of your ass cheeks and injects the contents. You whimper slightly.'
+									'You whimper slightly as Ninel jabs the needle into one of your ass cheeks and injects the contents.'
 									'"That''s about everything. You have to rest in bed, drink hot drinks, take antibiotics and nose drops and stay on a balanced diet. When your temperature drops, come to the clinic to see me."'
 									'"Thank you, Doctor, I''ll follow your instructions."'
-									'The doctor says goodbye and leaves.'
+									'Ninel smiles and says goodbye before leaving.'
 
-									act 'Back to bed':gt 'bedr'
+									act 'Back to bed': gt 'bedr'
 								end
 							end
 						end
@@ -396,39 +371,35 @@ $ninel0 = {
 						act 'What''s wrong with me?':
 							cla
 							'"Doctor, what''s wrong with me?" you ask fearfully.'
-							'"I''m afraid you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you recieve immediate treatment." she replies.'
-							'"What''s that?! You mean, in the hospital?" you shriek.'
-							'"Yes, at the clinic." she calmly replies.'
+							'"I''m afraid you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you recieve immediate treatment," she replies.'
+							'"What? You mean in the hospital?!" you shriek.'
+							'"Yes, at the clinic," she calmly replies.'
 
 							act 'Refuse':
-								cla
-								*clr
-								'"Doctor, I can''t go to the hospital!"'
-								'She smiles at you. "Well... I guess we could do it a different way then. I''ll give you a few shots to start with.'
+								*clr & cla
+								'"I can''t go to the hospital!"'
+								'She smiles at you. "Well... I guess we could do it a different way then. I''ll give you a few shots to start with."'
 								'"Oh thank you, doctor!"'
 
 								act 'Lie on your stomach and bare your ass':
-									cla
-									clr
-									gs 'stat'
+									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom9.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass cheek and then pats your ass a few times. You suddenly develop an incredible sexual arousal, as if a fire has started between your thighs. Your pussy burns and drips, your breath gets heavy and your nipples harden.'
+									'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass cheek and you find yourself suddenly becoming incredibly aroused, your pussy growing wet and aching to be invaded as your breath quickens and your nipples grow hard with desire.'
 									'"Doctor, what''s happening?" you ask, almost screaming. You feel embarrassed and frightened, but your voice breaks, betraying your arousal, and you moan voluptuously.'
-									'"I knew it! I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my power quietly."'
+									'"I knew it! I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my healing powers on you."'
 									'"So you''re a succubus too?!"'
 									'"Yes, but only with a special kind of magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
 									'"No, I don''t think so..."'
 									'"It''s based on sensuality and sex, roughly speaking, I can cast spells only while having sex."'
 									'"So...?"'
-									'"That''s it. If we have sex, I will heal you. Do you agree?!'
+									'"That''s it. If we have sex, I will heal you. Do you agree?"'
 									'"And what should I do in return?"'
-									'"Nothing. I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction. I''ll see that you only have orgasms if conjured.'
-									'"Then of course I agree."'
-
+									'"Nothing. I''m doing it solely for my own satisfaction."'
+									'"Then I agree."'
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 									gs 'stat'
 
-									act 'Surrender to the gentle touch of Ninel':gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
+									act 'Surrender to the gentle touch of Ninel': gt 'housecall', 'ninel2'
 								end
 							end
 						end
@@ -442,62 +413,56 @@ $ninel0 = {
 $drPP = {
 	cla
 	*clr
-	'You answer the door. On the threshold is an older, balding man with a medical bag in his hand.'
+	'You answer the door and an older, balding man with a medical bag in his hand is standing on the threshold.'
 	'"Hello, doctor."'
-	'"Hello, dear. I''m the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this cold air.'
+	'"Hello, dear. I''m the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this cold air."'
 
 	act 'Go back to bed':
-		cla
-		*clr
+		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp1.jpg"></center>'
 		'You walk back to the bedroom with the doctor. He sits on the edge of the bed and feels your forehead.'
 		'"So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>. What are your symptoms?'
-		'"Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have a sore throat - very sore actually - and a high temperature."'
+		'"Ahem... I have a sore throat - very sore actually - and a high temperature."'
 		'"And a nasty cough too I see. And judging by your voice, also a running nose."'
 		'"Yes... Aachoo!!"'
-		'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, please remove your clothes so I can examine you."'
+		'"Please remove your clothes so I can examine you."'
 
 		act 'Undress':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
-			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp2.jpg"></center>'
 			'You undress and the doctor listens to your lungs for a while.'
-			'"Now let''s take a look at your throat. Open your mouth wide and say Aahh."'
+			'"Now let''s take a look at your throat. Open your mouth wide and say ''ahh''."'
 
 			act 'Aahh':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp3.jpg"></center>'
 				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in.'
 				'"Mmmm, I see. Well, let''s take your temperature."'
 
 				act 'Put the thermometer under your armpit':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp4.jpg"></center>'
 					'The doctor waits a few minutes, then looks at the thermometer and shakes his head.'
 
 					act 'What''s wrong with me?':
 						cla
-						'"You have the flu." he calmly replies. "Nothing too serious, I''ll just give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink plenty of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now please roll over so I can give you the injection."'
+						'"You have the flu," he calmly replies. "Nothing too serious, I''ll just give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink plenty of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. Now please roll over so I can give you the injection."'
 
 						act 'Roll over and lay on your stomach':
-							cla
-							*clr
+							*clr & cla
 							minut += 10
 							sick -= 2
 							lekarstvo += 3
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp5.jpg"></center>'
-							'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass and injects the contents.'
-							'"Now remember. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest. When you feel better come by the clinic."'
+							'You whimper slightly as the doctor jabs a needle into your ass and injects the contents.'
+							'"Now remember. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest. When you feel better, come by the clinic."'
 							'"Thank you, Doctor, I will."'
-							'You escort the doctor back to the entrace where he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door, you head back to bed.'
+							'You escort the doctor back to the entrance where he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door, you head back to bed.'
 
-							act 'Go back to bed':gt 'bedr'
+							act 'Go back to bed': gt 'bedr'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -525,42 +490,40 @@ $polidin = {
 
 			act 'Give your address':
 				cla
-				'You have a coughing fit before you''re able to answer. "Sorry, it''s <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4, apartment 69." you manage before sneezing.'
-				'"One moment please." she responds before she puts you on hold.'
+				'You have a coughing fit before you''re able to answer. "Sorry, it''s <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4, apartment 69," you manage before sneezing.'
+				'"One moment please," she responds before she puts you on hold.'
 
 				act 'Wait':
 					cla
 					minut += 5
-					clr
 					gs 'stat'
 					'You wait for five minutes, occasionally coughing and sneezing, until she finally returns. "So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, what are your symptoms?"'
-					'You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry, I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
+					'You start to answer, but end up coughing. "Sorry. I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
 					'"Is your temperature high?"'
-					'"Yes, quite so, 39.2°C." you tell her, followed by a sneeze.'
+					'"Yes, quite so. 39.2°C," you tell her, followed by a sneeze.'
 					'"Very well. A doctor will come see you at home."'
 					'"How soon?"'
-					'"As soon as one is free." she answers. "Yours isn''t an isolated case."'
-					'"Thank you." you respond and hang up.'
+					'"As soon as one is free," she answers. "Yours isn''t an isolated case."'
+					'"Thank you," you respond and hang up.'
 
 					if ninelsex = 1:
 						act 'Is Ninel available?':
 							cla
-							'"Is Doctor Pavlovna available? She is my regular doctor."'
+							'"Is Doctor Pavlovna available? She''s my regular doctor."'
 							'"Let me check." The nurse puts you on hold for a few minutes before returning. "Yes, she is free and will make the house call."'
-							'"Once again, thank you very much." you reply and hang up.'
+							'"Once again, thank you very much," you reply and hang up.'
 
-							act 'Continue':gt 'housecall', 'ninel3'
+							act 'Continue': gt 'housecall', 'ninel3'
 						end
 					end
 
 					act 'Go back to bed':
-						cla
-						*clr
+						*clr & cla
 						picrand = rand(21, 27)
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick<<picrand>>.jpg"></center>'
 						timerand = rand(1, 6)
 						minut += timerand * 30
-						'You lie in bed, shivering while wrapped in a blanket. Time drags by painfully slow. You can''t say how much time passes before the doorbell rings.'
+						'You lie in bed, shivering while wrapped in a blanket. Time drags by painfully slow and you can''t say how much time passes before the doorbell rings.'
 
 						! WD: Uninitialised ~ 'ninel' use 'ninelmet'
 						act 'Answer the door':
@@ -569,8 +532,8 @@ $polidin = {
 							elseif ninelmet = 0 or sick > 50:
 								doctrnd = rand(0, 1)
 
-								if doctrnd = 0:dynamic $drPP
-								if doctrnd = 1:gt 'housecall', 'ninel0'
+								if doctrnd = 0: dynamic $drPP
+								if doctrnd = 1: gt 'housecall', 'ninel0'
 							end
 						end
 					end

locations/korr2x.qsrc

@@ -37,10 +37,10 @@ if ParrotQW['Owned1'] = 1:'Your parrot <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$
 if parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 1:
 	parkblackmail = 2
 	parkday = daystart
-	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it, you''re horrified to find several pictures of you giving blowjobs to the guys in the park inside.'
-	'A small note accompanying them says:'
-	'"If you don''t want these pictures to be posted on your door and sent to your work place, then come to this address."'
-	'"PS, if you don''t come today, these pictures will be hanging in your stairwell tomorrow."'
+	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it, you''re horrified to find several pictures of you giving blowjobs to the guys in the park inside. A small note accompanying them says:'
+	*nl
+	'"If you don''t want these pictures to be posted on your door and sent to your work place, then come to this address. If you don''t come today, these pictures will be hanging in your stairwell tomorrow."'
+	*nl
 	'You check the address and find that it''s Aphrodite Photography in the City Center.'
 elseif parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 2:
 	parkblackmail = 0
@@ -48,20 +48,12 @@ elseif parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 2:
 	'You''re horrifed and embarrassed when you see photos of you with your face covered in cum with two dicks in your mouth covering your stairwell walls.'
 end
 
-act 'Go to the Bedroom':
-	gt'bedr2x'
-end
-act 'Go to the Bathroom':
-	gt'vanr2x'
-end
-act 'Go to the Kitchen':
-	gt'kuhr2x'
-end
-act 'Go to the Living Room':
-	gt'sitr2x'
-end
+act 'Go to the bedroom': gt'bedr2x'
+act 'Go to the bathroom': gt'vanr2x'
+act 'Go to the kitchen': gt'kuhr2x'
+act 'Go to the living room': gt'sitr2x'
 act '<b><font color="maroon">Go outside</font></b>':
-	cls
+	cla
 	if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 		'<b><font color="red">You need to get dressed before going out.</font></b>'
 		xgt $curloc
@@ -77,14 +69,14 @@ end
 if hour >= 9 and hour <= 20 and santehnikDolg > 0 and money >= santehnikDolg:
 	'<b><font color = red>The doorbell rings</font></b>'
 	act 'Answer the door':
-		cls
-		gs'stat'
+		cla
+		gs 'stat'
 		'You go to the door and look through the peephole to see a dark male figure. "It''s me. Grisha, the plumber. You owe me some money, remember?" he says through the door.'
 		act 'Open the door':
-			cls
+			cla
 			money -= santehnikDolg
 			santehnikDolg = 0
-			gs'stat'
+			gs 'stat'
 			'You open the door and Grisha smiles. "I thought you were hiding from me. So, do you have my money?" You nod and pay him the money you owe.'
 			act 'Close the door':gt $curloc
 		end
@@ -124,9 +116,9 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 		year += 5
 		age = year - ((pcs_dob - (pcs_dob mod 10000)) / 10000)
 		money = 2000
-		'The police arrive and take you to court. After standing trial, you are given five years of jail time and are required to pay your debt of <<DolgRS>>.'
+		'The police arrive and take you to court. After standing trial, you''re given five years of jail time and are required to pay your debt of <<DolgRS>>.'
 		act 'Serve your time':
-			cls
+			cla
 			srok_kolvo = 1
 			srok_otsidki += 5
 			salo = 10
@@ -155,9 +147,9 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 			preg = 0
 			young_shop_work = 0
 			gs 'uniutil', 'student', 'unenroll'
-			gs'stat'
-			'Time drags on slowly. Your life and work are tedious and monotonous. You''ve been sewing for five years, having meals in the dining room and going to sleep surrounded by other female inmates. 1,000 <b>₽</b> of your 2,000 <b>₽</b> per month salary goes towards your debt repayment.' 
-			'As slow as it seems, time doesn''t stand still and your torment finally comes to an end. You are released and given 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You board the train and return to the city.'
+			gs 'stat'
+			'Time drags on slowly. Your life and work are tedious and monotonous. You sew, have meals in the dining room and go to sleep surrounded by other female inmates. 1,000 <b>₽</b> of your 2,000 <b>₽</b> per month salary goes towards your debt repayment.' 
+			'As slow as it seems, time doesn''t stand still and your torment finally comes to an end. You''re released and given 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You board the train and return to the city.'
 			act 'Get off the train': gt 'city_industrial_train', 'outside'
 		end
 	end
@@ -166,92 +158,86 @@ end
 if BurgerQW['IlyQWDay'] ! daystart and BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 1 and hour >= 8 and hour <= 20:
 	'<b><font color = red>The doorbell rings</font></b>'
 	act 'Answer the door':
-		cls
-		gs'stat'
+		cla
+		gs 'stat'
 		'You walk up to the door and look through the peephole. You see a few men, and even in the dark, you recognize them from their caps. "<<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>! This is the police, open up!"'
 		act 'Open the door':
-			cls
+			cla
 			minut += 120
 			BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 2
-			gs'stat'
-			'You open the door, wondering what they want from you. There are several men in uniform and others in civilian clothes. A lean and skinny man with with a weeks worth of stubble and a pistol in a holster slung under his armpit speaks to you. "Please take a seat while we search the apartment. This is a warrant for your arrest and this is a search warrant for your apartment. You can read them." The men start searching your apartment and a few minutes later, one of them reappears. "Here are the keys. According to the description, these look like the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen." The detective frowns at you and nods to the officer, who pulls your hands behind your back and snaps the handcuffs around your wrists.'
+			gs 'stat'
+			'You open the door, wondering what they want from you. There are several men in uniform and others in civilian clothes. A lean and skinny man with with a weeks worth of stubble and a pistol in a holster slung under his armpit speaks to you. "Please take a seat while we search the apartment. This is a warrant for your arrest and this is a search warrant for your apartment. You can read them." The men start searching your apartment and a few minutes later, one of them reappears. "Here are the keys. According to the description, these look like the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen." The detective frowns at you and nods at the officer, who pulls your hands behind your back and snaps the handcuffs around your wrists.'
 			wait 1500
-			'You''re escorted out of the building in handcuffs and pushed into a police car. After the door slams shut, the car starts up and drives through the city streets until it stops outside the police station and you''re pulled out and brought into an interview room where the dectective is waiting for you. He takes the handcuffs off you and offers you a seat. You sit in a hard and uncomfortable chair while the detective turns the TV on and inserts a video tape. On the screen is footage from a security camera in Bystroeshke showing you appear in the corridor and entering the office before exiting a few minutes later holding a thick envelope. The detective takes the tape out and inserts another one.' 
-			'It shows Chubais'' office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and take the envelope with <<$BurgerQW[''IlySecurityCamDesc'']>> written on it. The detective turns the TV off, picks up a plastic bag with the keys inside and finally speaks. "Tests prove that the keys found in your apartment are those to the office and the safe of Bystroezhki. The tapes from the surveillance cameras clearly show you entering the office and taking 650,000 rubles." He takes out a pen and paper and begins to write. While writing, he looks up to you with gloomy eyes and says "A confession will help you in the court. Since this is a first time offense and provided you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence if you admit your guilt."'
+			'You''re escorted out of the building in handcuffs and pushed into a police car. After the door slams shut, the car starts up and drives through the city streets until it stops outside the police station and you''re pulled out and brought into an interview room where the dectective is waiting for you. He takes the handcuffs off you and offers you a seat. You sit in a hard and uncomfortable chair while the detective turns the TV on and inserts a video tape. On the screen is footage from a security camera in Bystroeshke showing you appear in the corridor and enter the office before exiting a few minutes later holding a thick envelope. The detective takes the tape out and inserts another one.' 
+			'It shows Chubais'' office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and take the envelope with <<$BurgerQW[''IlySecurityCamDesc'']>> written on it. The detective turns the TV off, picks up a plastic bag with the keys inside and finally speaks. "Tests prove that the keys found in your apartment are those to the office and the safe of Bystroezhki. The tapes from the surveillance cameras clearly show you entering the office and taking 650,000 rubles." He takes out a pen and paper and begins to write. While writing, he looks up at you with gloomy eyes. "A confession will help you in the court. Since this is a first time offense and provided you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence if you admit your guilt."'
 			act 'Sign the confession':
-				cls
+				cla
 				minut += 60
-				gs'stat'
+				gs 'stat'
 				'You sign the confession and the detective signals for an officer, who enters the room as the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
-				act 'Go with him':gt'kameraKPZ'
+				act 'Go with him': gt'kameraKPZ'
 			end
 			act 'Tell the truth':
-				cls
+				cla
 				minut += 60
-				gs'stat'
+				gs 'stat'
 				'You tell the detective what actually happened and how Ilyushkin framed you, but he barely listens to you before he slams his fist on the table and yells at you. "I wasn''t born yesterday! If you will not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" An officer then enters the room and the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
-				act 'Go with him':gt'kameraKPZ'
+				act 'Go with him': gt'kameraKPZ'
 			end
 		end
 	end
 	exit
 end
-if gopstop > 30: gt'police','1'
+if gopstop > 30: gt 'police','1'
 
-if sick > 0 and doktorday ! daystart: act 'Call a doctor':doktorday = daystart & dynamic $polidin
+if sick > 0 and doktorday ! daystart: act 'Call a doctor': doktorday = daystart & dynamic $polidin
 
 $drPP = {
-	cla
-	*clr
+	*clr & cla
 	'You answer the door. On the threshold is an older, balding man with a medical bag in his hand.'
 	'"Hello, doctor."'
 	'"Hello, dear. I''m the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this cold air.'
 	act 'Go back to bed':
-		cla
-		*clr
+		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp1.jpg"></center>'
 		'You walk back to the bedroom with the doctor. He sits on the edge of the bed and feels your forehead.'
 		'"So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>. What are your symptoms?'
-		'"Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have a sore throat - very sore actually - and a high temperature."'
+		'"Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have a sore throat - very sore actually - and a high temperature," you reply.'
 		'"And a nasty cough too I see. And judging by your voice, also a running nose."'
 		'"Yes... Aachoo!!"'
-		'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, please remove your clothes so I can examine you."'
+		'"Please remove your clothes so I can examine you," he orders.'
 		act 'Undress':
-			cla
-			*clr
+			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			clr
-			gs'stat'
+			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp2.jpg"></center>'
 			'You undress and the doctor listens to your lungs for a while.'
-			'"Now let''s take a look at your throat. Open your mouth wide and say Aahh."'
+			'"Now let''s take a look at your throat. Open your mouth wide and say ''aahh''."'
 			act 'Ahh':
-				cla
-				*clr
+				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp3.jpg"></center>'
 				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in.'
-				'"Mmmm, I see. Well, let''s take your temperature."'
+				'"Mmmm, I see. Let''s take your temperature."'
 				act 'Put the thermometer under your armpit':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp4.jpg"></center>'
 					'The doctor waits a few minutes, then looks at the thermometer and shakes his head.'
 					act 'What''s wrong with me?':
 						cla
-						'You have the flu." he calmly replies. "Nothing too serious, I''ll just give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink plenty of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now please roll over so I can give you the injection."'
+						'You have the flu," he calmly replies. "Nothing too serious, I''ll just give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink plenty of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better, come to the clinic. Now please roll over so I can give you the injection."'
 						act 'Roll over':
-							cla
-							*clr
+							*clr & cla
 							minut += 10
-							sick = sick - 2
+							sick - 2
 							lekarstvo += 3
-							gs'stat'
+							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp5.jpg"></center>'
 							'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass and injects the contents.'
 							'"Now remember. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest. When you feel better come by the clinic."'
-							'"Thank you, Doctor, I will."'
-							'You escort the doctor back to the entrace where he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door, you head back to bed.'
-							act 'Go back to bed':gt'bedr2x'
+							'"Thank you Doctor, I will."'
+							'You escort the doctor back to the entrance, where he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door, you head back to bed.'
+							act 'Go back to bed': gt'bedr2x'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -261,10 +247,10 @@ $drPP = {
 }
 
 $polidin = {
-	cla
-	*clr
-	minut = minut + 15
-	callrand = RAND(0,2)
+	*clr & cla
+	minut + 15
+	gs 'stat'
+	callrand = rand(0,2)
 	if callrand = 0:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall.jpg"></center>'
 	if callrand = 1:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall.jpg"></center>'
 	if callrand = 2:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall.jpg"></center>'
@@ -278,34 +264,32 @@ $polidin = {
 			'"Your name and address, please?" she asks.'
 			act 'Give your address':
 				cla
-				'You have a coughing fit before you''re able to answer. "Sorry, it''s <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4, apartment 69." you manage before sneezing.'
-				'"One moment please." she responds before she puts you on hold.'
+				'You have a coughing fit before you''re able to answer. "Sorry, it''s <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4, apartment 69," you manage before sneezing.'
+				'"One moment please," she responds before she puts you on hold.'
 				act 'Wait':
 					cla
-					minut = minut + 5
-					clr
-					gs'stat'
+					minut += 5
+					gs 'stat'
 					'You wait for five minutes, occasionally coughing and sneezing, until she finally returns. "So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, what are your symptoms?"'
-					'You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry, I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
+					'You start to answer, but end up coughing. "Sorry, I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
 					'"Is your temperature high?"'
-					'"Yes, quite so, 39.2°C." you tell her, followed by a sneeze.'
+					'"Yes, quite so. 39.2°C," you tell her, followed by a sneeze.'
 					'"Very well. A doctor will come see you at home."'
 					'"How soon?"'
-					'"As soon as one is free." she answers. "Yours isn''t an isolated case."'
-					'"Thank you." you respond and hang up.'
+					'"As soon as one is free," she answers. "Yours isn''t an isolated case."'
+					'"Thank you," you respond and hang up.'
 					if ninelsex = 1:
 						act 'Is Ninel available?':
 							cla
 							'"Is Doctor Pavlovna available? She is my regular doctor."'
 							'"Let me check." The nurse puts you on hold for a few minutes before returning. "Yes, she is free and will make the house call."'
-							'"Once again, thank you very much." you reply and hang up.'
+							'"Once again, thank you very much," you reply and hang up.'
 							act 'Continue':gt'housecall','ninel3'
 						end
 					end
 					act 'Go back to bed':
-						cla
-						*clr
-						picrand = RAND(0,6)
+						*clr & cla
+						picrand = rand(0,6)
 						if picrand = 0:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick27.jpg"></center>'
 						if picrand = 1:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick21.jpg"></center>'
 						if picrand = 2:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick22.jpg"></center>'
@@ -313,7 +297,7 @@ $polidin = {
 						if picrand = 4:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick24.jpg"></center>'
 						if picrand = 5:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick25.jpg"></center>'
 						if picrand = 6:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/sick26.jpg"></center>'
-						timerand = RAND(0,5)
+						timerand = rand(0,5)
 						if timerand = 0:minut = minut + 30
 						if timerand = 1:minut = minut + 60
 						if timerand = 2:minut = minut + 90
@@ -323,11 +307,11 @@ $polidin = {
 						'You lie in bed, shivering while wrapped in a blanket. Time drags by painfully slow. You can''t say how much time passes before the doorbell rings.'
 						act 'Open the door':
 							if ninelmet > 0 and sick <= 50:
-								gt'housecall','ninel1'
+								gt 'housecall','ninel1'
 							elseif ninelmet = 0 or sick > 50:
-								doctrnd = RAND(0,1)
+								doctrnd = rand(0,1)
 								if doctrnd = 0:dynamic $drPP
-								if doctrnd = 1:gt'housecall','ninel0'
+								if doctrnd = 1: gt 'housecall','ninel0'
 							end
 						end
 					end

locations/kuhr.qsrc

@@ -27,8 +27,8 @@ if remkuhr = 1:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residentia
 if kransloman = 1:
 	cla
 	'You notice a leak in your sink. It''s broken and you''ll need to call a plumber.'
-	if Grisha = 0:act 'Call the plumber':dynamic $santehnik
-	if Grisha > 0:act 'Call Grisha':dynamic $santehnikgr
+	if Grisha = 0: act 'Call the plumber': dynamic $santehnik
+	if Grisha > 0: act 'Call Grisha': dynamic $santehnikgr
 
 	act 'Leave': killvar 'fullmorrout' & gt 'korr' 
 
@@ -67,13 +67,12 @@ end
 if edahot > 0:'<a href="exec:dynamic $edahotd">There''s a warm meal on the table.</a>'
 
 if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10:
-	if hour = 7 or hour = 17:'<a href="exec:gt ''husb'', ''start''">Your husband is eating at the table.</a>'
+	if hour = 7 or hour = 17: 'Your <a href="exec:gt ''husb'', ''start''">husband /a> is eating at the table.'
 end
 
 if husband > 0 and husbanday > 0 and huseatday ! daystart and eda >= 2:
 	act 'Cook a meal for your husband and yourself (1:00)':
-		cla
-		*clr
+		*clr & cla
 		husband += 5
 		eda -= 2
 		minut += 60
@@ -109,8 +108,7 @@ end
 
 if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 	act 'Masturbate with dildo':
-		cla
-		*clr
+		*clr & cla
 		if pcs_inhib < 30:inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 		pcs_mood += 15
 		pcs_vag += 1
@@ -120,29 +118,27 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 				gt 'husbsex','husb_mastr_vtor'
 			else
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Unable to control yourself, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time in attaching the suction base of the dildo to the floor before lowering yourself slowly onto it.'
-				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your lips and soon the whole length begins to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when the dildo bottoms out inside you.'
-				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. Your ass is hammering against the floor with each thrust and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as your entire body is overwhelmed in pleasure.'
-				'Your juices drip down the length of the dildo, pooling on the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a satisfied smile grows on your face. That was just what you needed!'
-				
+				'Unable to control yourself anymore, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time and attach the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before slowly lowering yourself.'
+				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your pussy lips and soon the whole length starts to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when it finally bottoms out inside you, sending you to the heavens and back.'
+				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. You''re soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as a wonderful feeling run through your entire body.'
+				'You''re soon twitching on the dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a smile grows along your face. That was just what you needed!'
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'masturbate'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				
-				act 'Breathe':gt 'kuhr'
+				act 'Breathe': gt 'kuhr'
 			end
 		else
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'Unable to control yourself, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time in attaching the suction base of the dildo to the floor before lowering yourself slowly onto it.'
-			'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your lips and soon the whole length begins to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when the dildo bottoms out inside you.'
-			'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. Your ass is hammering against the floor with each thrust and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as your entire body is overwhelmed in pleasure.'
-			'Your juices drip down the length of the dildo, pooling on the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a satisfied smile grows on your face. That was just what you needed!'
-				
+			'Unable to control yourself anymore, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time and attach the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before slowly lowering yourself.'
+			'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your pussy lips and soon the whole length starts to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when it finally bottoms out inside you, sending you to the heavens and back.'
+			'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. You''re soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as a wonderful feeling run through your entire body.'
+			'You''re soon twitching on the dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a smile grows along your face. That was just what you needed!'
 			$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'masturbate'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
-				
-			act 'Breathe':gt 'kuhr'
+		
+			act 'Breathe': gt 'kuhr'
 		end
 	end
 end

locations/sitr.qsrc

@@ -21,34 +21,34 @@ if remsitr = 0:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sitr1.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 
-	$zal = 'A cramped room'
+	$zal = 'A poorly decorated and cramped room'
 	$zal2 = 'faded wall'
 elseif remsitr = 1:
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/sitr2.jpg"></center>'
 	$zal = 'A modern, bright room'
-	$zal2 = 'papered walls with light'
+	$zal2 = 'papered walls'
 end
-if TV = 0:$TV = 'a great place for a TV, if you had one.'
-if TV = 1:$TV = 'an old CRT <a href="exec:gt ''TV'', ''start''">TV</a>'
-if TV = 2:$TV = 'a huge plasma <a href="exec:gt ''TV'', ''start''">TV</a>'
+if TV = 0: $TV = 'a great place for a TV, if you had one.'
+if TV = 1: $TV = 'an old CRT <a href="exec:gt ''TV'', ''start''">television</a>'
+if TV = 2: $TV = 'a huge plasma <a href="exec:gt ''TV'', ''start''">TV</a>'
 ! WD: Missing Code to buy / Upgrade Sofa, Uninitialised ~ 'divan'
-if divan = 0:$divan = '<a href="exec:gt ''divan'', ''start''">an old sofa</a>'
-if divan = 1:$divan = '<a href="exec:gt ''divan'', ''start''">a luxurious leather sofa</a>'
+if divan = 0:$divan = '<a href="exec:gt ''divan'', ''start''">An old sofa</a>'
+if divan = 1:$divan = '<a href="exec:gt ''divan'', ''start''">A luxurious leather sofa</a>'
 if komp = 0:$komp = ''
 if komp = 1:
 	!!TODO: Code to check if Sveta is not alone or something limits what she can do.
 	gs 'internet_mobile', 'get_access'
-	$komp = ' with a <a href="exec:gt ''Komp'', ''start''">computer</a> on top of it'
+	$komp = 'A <a href="exec:gt ''Komp'', ''start''">computer</a> sits on top of it.'
 end
+! WD: Missing Code to buy / upgrade table, Uninitialised ~ 'stol'
+if stol = 0: $stol = 'an old wooden <a href="exec:gt ''stol'', ''start''">table</a>'
+if stol = 1: $stol = 'a new <a href="exec:gt ''stol'', ''start''">table</a>'
 
-! WD: Missing Code to buy / Upgrade table, Uninitialised ~ 'stol'
-if stol = 0:$stol = 'an old wooden <a href="exec:gt ''stol'', ''start''">table</a>'
-if stol = 1:$stol = 'a new <a href="exec:gt ''stol'', ''start''">table</a>'
-if obruch > 0: '<br>Your hula hoop stands in a corner of the room. '
+'<<$zal>>. <<$divan>> sits next to the <<$zal2>>. In front of the sofa is <<$TV>>, while <<$stol>> sits in front of the window. <<$komp>>'
+if mishka > 0: iif(mishka = 1, 'Your teddy bear is', 'Your <<mishka>> teddy bears are') + 'sitting on a shelf.'
+if obruch > 0: '<br>Your hula hoop stands in a corner of the room.'
 if skak > 0: 'Your jump rope is on a shelf. '
-if bookYog > 0: 'Your yoga mat is rolled up in a corner. '
-'<<$zal>>, <<$divan>> stands next to the <<$zal2>>. In front of the sofa is <<$TV>>. In front of the window is <<$stol>><<$komp>>.'
-if mishka > 0: iif(mishka = 1, 'Your teddy bear is', 'Your <<mishka>> teddy bears are') + ' on a shelf.'
+if bookYog > 0: 'Your yoga mat is rolled up in a corner.'
 
 *nl
 !gs'husb' - do not delete!
@@ -60,11 +60,11 @@ gs 'exercise', 'start'
 
 *nl
 !!housegostrand = rand(1, 20)
-!!if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10 and week = 5 and hour > 17 and hour < 21 and housegostrand > 15:gt 'sitr', 'guest'
+!!if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10 and week = 5 and hour > 17 and hour < 21 and housegostrand > 15: gt 'sitr', 'guest'
 
 if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 	if (week >= 6 and hour > 7 and hour < 17) or (hour > 17 and hour <= 22):
-		'<a href="exec:gt ''husb'', ''start''">Your husband sits on the couch and watches television.</a>'
+		'Your <a href="exec:gt ''husb'', ''start''">husband</a> is sitting on the couch, watching television.'
 		gs 'music_actions', 'not_alone'
 	else
 		gs 'music_actions', 'clear_restrictions'
@@ -88,32 +88,31 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 				gt 'husbsex','husb_mastr_vtor'
 			else
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Unable to control yourself anymore, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time attaching the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before lowering yourself slowly to its tip.'
-				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel that thick head spreading your pussy-lips, and soon, the whole length begins to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when that delicious cock finally bottoms out in your cunt, sending you to the heavens and back.'
-				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts- soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and time again. It takes you just a few minutes to reach that so wanted orgasm, your toes curling tightly as that wonderful feeling run through your entire body...'
-				'Soon you''re twitching onto that dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths, and a smile grows along your face after cumming so hard there. That was just what you needed!'
-
+				'Unable to control yourself anymore, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time and attach the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before slowly lowering yourself.'
+				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your pussy lips and soon the whole length starts to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when it finally bottoms out inside you, sending you to the heavens and back.'
+				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. You''re soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as a wonderful feeling run through your entire body.'
+				'You''re soon twitching on the dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a smile grows along your face. That was just what you needed!'
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'masturbate'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				
-				act 'Breathe':gt 'sitr'
+				act 'Breathe': gt 'sitr'
 			end
 		else
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'Unable to control yourself anymore, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time attaching the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before lowering yourself slowly to its tip.'
-			'Shivers run down your spine as you feel that thick head spreading your pussy-lips, and soon, the whole length begins to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when that delicious cock finally bottoms out in your cunt, sending you to the heavens and back.'
-			'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts- soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and time again. It takes you just a few minutes to reach that so wanted orgasm, your toes curling tightly as that wonderful feeling run through your entire body...'
-			'Soon you''re twitching onto that dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths, and a smile grows along your face after cumming so hard there. That was just what you needed!'
-
+			'Unable to control yourself anymore, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time and attach the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before slowly lowering yourself.'
+			'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your pussy lips and soon the whole length starts to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when it finally bottoms out inside you, sending you to the heavens and back.'
+			'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. You''re soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as a wonderful feeling run through your entire body.'
+			'You''re soon twitching on the dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a smile grows along your face. That was just what you needed!'
 			$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10, 'masturbate'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			
-			act 'Breathe':gt 'sitr'
+			act 'Breathe': gt 'sitr'
 		end
 	end
 end
-if pcs_horny >= 50: act 'Masturbate':gt 'selfplay', 'start'
+if pcs_horny >= 50: act 'Masturbate': gt 'selfplay', 'start'
+
 --- sitr ---------------------------------
 

locations/sitr2x.qsrc

@@ -43,7 +43,7 @@ if obruch > 0:'Your hula hoop stands in a corner.'
 if skak > 0:'Your jump rope is on a shelf.'
 if bookYog > 0:'Your book on yoga and your yoga mat are in the cabinet.'
 
-if mishka > 0:iif(mishka = 1, 'Your teddy bear is', 'Your <<mishka>> teddy bears are') + ' on a shelf.'
+if mishka > 0:iif(mishka = 1, 'Your teddy bear is', 'Your <<mishka>> teddy bears are') + 'sitting on a shelf.'
 if $ml_guitar['location'] = $loc: 'Your guitar rests on its stand next to the sofa.'
 *nl
 
@@ -55,7 +55,7 @@ gs 'exercise', 'start'
 
 if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10 and husbandrinkday ! daystart:
 	if (week >= 6 and hour > 7 and hour < 17) or (hour > 17 and hour <= 22):
-		'<a href="exec: gt''husb'',''start'' ">Your husband is sitting on the couch watching TV.</a>'
+		'Your <a href="exec: gt''husb'',''start'' ">husband</a> is sitting on the couch watching television.'
 		gs 'music_actions', 'not_alone'
 	else
 		gs 'music_actions', 'clear_restrictions'
@@ -66,7 +66,7 @@ if husband > 0 and husbandrinkday = daystart and hour >= 20 and hour <= 23: gs '
 
 gs 'music_actions', 'music_icon'
 
-gs'subkid'
+gs 'subkid'
 
 act 'Go out on the balcony': gt 'balkon','start'
 
@@ -75,8 +75,7 @@ gs 'events', 'read'
 
 if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 	act 'Masturbate':
-		cla
-		*clr
+		*clr & cla
 		if pcs_inhib < 30:inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 
 		if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10:

locations/sitrPar.qsrc

@@ -22,10 +22,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/sitrpar.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	act 'Leave the room':gt 'korrPar'
-	act 'Sit on the sofa':gt 'sitrPar', 'sofa'
+	act 'Leave the room': gt 'korrPar'
+	act 'Sit on the sofa': gt 'sitrPar', 'sofa'
 	''
-	'The living room has a <a href="exec:gt ''TV'',''pav''">TV</a>, which is near the window. In front of the TV is a <a href="exec:gt ''sitrPar'',''sofa''">sofa bed</a>, on which your brother sleeps at night. A large tapestry covers one wall, while the other wall has several shelves on it, stocked with books and other things.'
+	'The living room has a <a href="exec:gt ''TV'',''pav''">TV</a> near the window. In front of the TV is a <a href="exec:gt ''sitrPar'',''sofa''">sofa bed</a> on which your brother sleeps at night. A large tapestry covers one wall, while the other wall has several shelves on it, stocked with books and other things.'
 	*nl
 	if locat['Fam_livingroom'] = 0 and locat['Mother'] ! 24 and locat['Mother'] ! 19:
 		'No one else is here right now, so you''re free to use the room how you like.'
@@ -33,23 +33,23 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 	end
 
 	if locat['Kolka'] = 2 and brothermorningsex = daystart:
-		'Your younger brother <a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is getting ready for school.'
+		'<a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is getting ready for school.'
 	elseif locat['Kolka'] = 1:
-		'Your younger brother <a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is sleeping on the sofa.'
+		'<a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is sleeping on the sofa.'
 	elseif locat['Kolka'] = 7:
-		'Your little brother <a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is sitting by the table and doing his homework.'
+		'<a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is sitting by the table and doing his homework.'
 	elseif locat['Kolka'] = 11:
 		if locat['Mother'] = 19 or locat['Stepdad'] = 10:
-			'Your younger brother <a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is sitting in the armchair, playing on his phone.'
+			'<a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is sitting in the armchair playing on his phone.'
 		else
-			'Your younger brother <a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is sitting on the sofa, playing video games.'
+			'<a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> is sitting on the sofa playing video games.'
 		end
 	end
 	*nl
-	if month = 12 and day >= 20:'A Christmas tree stands next to the TV, decorated with tinsel garlands and other ornaments.'
+	if month = 12 and day >= 20: 'A Christmas tree stands next to the TV, decorated with tinsel garlands and other ornaments.'
 	if month = 12 and day = 31 and hour >= 20:
 		act 'Celebrate the New Year with your family.':
-			cls
+			cla
 			gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A29', 10
 			gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A28', 10
 			gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A33', 10
@@ -62,12 +62,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 			pcs_mood += 100
 			gs 'food', 'l_meal'
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You sit at the festive table laid in front of the TV and celebrate the New Year with your family, the TV providing some background noise. At the table, people strike up a conversation and common problems are forgotten for a while, everyone is having fun talking to each other. At midnight, everyone wishes one another a happy New Year and enjoys the champagne and fireworks outside. Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> gives you an envelope with a greeting card and 5000 <b>₽</b>. For a while, you continue to watch TV, enjoying the champagne and company of your family, but eventually, everyone is kind of tired and one by one they go to bed.'
+			'You sit at the festive table laid in front of the TV and celebrate the New Year with your family, the TV providing some background noise. At the table, people strike up a conversation and common problems are forgotten as everyone is has fun talking to each other. At midnight, everyone wishes one another a happy New Year and enjoys the champagne and fireworks outside as your mother gives you an envelope with a greeting card and 5000 <b>₽</b>.' 
+			'You continue to watch TV and enjoy the champagne and company of your family, but everyone eventually grows tired and they go to bed, one by one.'
 
 			act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 		end
 	elseif month = 1 and day = 1:
-		act 'Eat some leftovers at the festive table.':
+		act 'Eat some leftovers at the festive table':
 			frost = 0
 			minut += 10
 			pcs_health += 10
@@ -94,22 +95,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/uborka1.jpg"></center>'
 		if kanikuli = 0 and mid($start_type,1,2) = 'sg' and SchoolAtestat = 0 and SchoolBlock = 0 and week < 6:
 			if CloStyle2 = 4:
-				'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She looks up and gives you a disappointed look. "What are you still doing home? Go to school, now!" With that, she practically pushes you out of the apartment and closes the door. As she does, she adds once more, "Go to school."' 
-				act 'Continue': gt'pod_ezd','etaj_2'
+				'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She looks up and gives you a disappointed look. "What are you still doing here? Go to school, now!" She practically pushes you out of the apartment and closes the door.' 
+				act 'Continue': gt 'pod_ezd','etaj_2'
 			else
 				gs 'wardrobe', 'school_outfit'
-				'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She looks up and gives you a disappointed look. "What are you still doing home? Why are you not wearing your uniform? Go get changed and go to school, now!" She follows you back to your room and watches as you change into your uniform. After that, she practically pushes you out of the apartment and closes the door. As she does, she adds once more, "Go to school."' 
-				act 'Continue':  gt'pod_ezd','etaj_2'
+				'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She looks up and gives you a disappointed look. "What are you still doing here and ehy are you not wearing your uniform? Get changed and go to school, now!" She follows you back to your room and watches as you change into your uniform. After that, she practically pushes you out of the apartment and closes the door.' 
+				act 'Continue': gt 'pod_ezd','etaj_2'
 			end
 		else
-			'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She hasn''t noticed you, she is intent on cleaning.'
+			'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother sweeping the floor. She hasn''t noticed you because she''s intent on cleaning.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 		end
 		exit
 	elseif locat['Mother'] = 19 and locat['Stepdad'] = 10:
 		!! Watches TV with Vladimir
 		!!'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/momvladtv.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you walk into the living room, you see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and Vladimir sitting on the couch watching TV.'
+		'As you walk into the living room, you see your mother and Vladimir sitting on the couch watching TV.'
 		act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
 		
 		act 'Join them':
@@ -121,7 +122,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 			npc_rel['A34'] += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			!!'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familytv.jpg"></center>'
-			'You move over to join them, and your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> scoots away from Vladimir and pats the spot between her and him. You take a seat between them. Vlad barely even glances at you with a brief smile before he goes back to watching TV. Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> pats you on the shoulder before returning her attention to the TV, apparently happy the family is spending time together.'
+			'You move over to join them, and your mother scoots away from Vladimir and pats the spot between her and him. You take a seat between them and Vlad barely even glances at you with a brief smile before he goes back to watching TV. Your mother pats you on the shoulder before returning her attention to the TV, apparently happy the family is spending time together.'
 			act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
 			
 			act 'Keep watching':gt 'sitrPar', 'TVfam'
@@ -129,7 +130,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 		end
 	elseif locat['Mother'] = 19:
 		!!Mom by herself watching TV
-		'As you walk into the living room, you see your <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a> sitting on the couch watching TV.'
+		'As you walk into the living room, you see your <a href="exec:gt''mother''">mother</a> sitting on the couch watching TV.'
 	elseif locat['Stepdad'] = 10:
 		!!Dad watching TV by himself
 		'Your <a href="exec:gt ''father''">stepfather</a> is sitting on the sofa, watching TV.'
@@ -153,7 +154,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '':
 	end
 end
 
-if $ARGS[0]='sofa':
+if $ARGS[0]= 'sofa':
 	$menu_loc = 'sitrPar'
 	$menu_arg = 'sofa'
 	menu_off = 0
@@ -166,14 +167,14 @@ if $ARGS[0]='sofa':
 	*nl
 	'<center>A small sofa bed, when not folded out into a bed, is just big enough for you to curl up on and take a nap.</center>'
 
-	act 'Get up':gt 'sitrPar'
-	act 'Watch TV':gt 'TV','pav'
+	act 'Get up': gt 'sitrPar'
+	act 'Watch TV': gt 'TV','pav'
 
 	if locat['Fam_livingroom'] = 0 and pornMagazine > 0:
-		'<br>There is a porn magazine under the sofa cushions'
+		'<br>There is a porn magazine under the sofa cushions.'
 		gs 'events', 'read_porn'
 		if pcs_horny >= 50:
-			act 'Masturbate':gt 'selfplay', 'start'
+			act 'Masturbate': gt 'selfplay', 'start'
 		end
 	end
 
@@ -186,11 +187,11 @@ if $ARGS[0]='sofa':
 				pcs_health += 5
 				minut += 60
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You sleep about an hour.'
+				'You sleep for about an hour.'
 			else
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You are not tired enough to sleep, even for a short nap.'
+				'You''re not tired enough to sleep, even for a short nap.'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -203,7 +204,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'TVfam':
 	gs 'family_schedule'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familytv.jpg"></center>'
-	'You continue to watch TV with the family. Everyone seems very engrossed in the program and almost never says anything, though Kolka occasionally makes a crack about what is happening, often getting shushed by Vlad or <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>.'
+	'You continue to watch TV with the family. Everyone seems very engrossed in the program and almost never says anything, though Kolka occasionally makes a crack about what is happening, often getting shushed by Vlad or your mother.'
 	if locat['Mother'] = 19: act 'Keep watching TV with your family': gt 'sitrPar', 'TVfam'
 	act 'Finish watching':gt 'sitrPar', 'TVend'
 end
@@ -213,8 +214,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'TVend':
 	gs 'family_schedule'
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/familytv.jpg"></center>'
-	'Once the show is over, Vladimir picks up the remote and turns the TV off. He gets up then stretches before he turns and walks out of the room, likely heading to bed. <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> gets up and says to you, "You should go to bed or at least go to your room so your brother can get his rest." She then turns to Kolka and says to him, "Don''t stay up, go to bed." With that, she also leaves after making sure you leave as well. As you walk out, you see Kolka putting his pillow and sheet on the couch.'
-	act 'Leave':gt 'korrPar'
+	'Once the show is over, Vladimir picks up the remote and turns the TV off. He gets up and stretches before he turns and walks out of the room, likely heading to bed. Your mother also gets up. "You should go to bed or at least go to your room so your brother can get his rest." She then turns to Kolka. "Don''t stay up, go to bed." She then ushers you out of the room. As you walk out, you see Kolka putting his pillow and sheet on the couch.'
+	act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'occupied':