[text edits] Standard Lydia proofing

locations/pav_train_market.qsrc

@@ -28,19 +28,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/grinok.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 	*nl
-	'This small open air market is located near the train station.'
+	'This small open-air market is located near the train station.'
 	*nl
-	'On one of the stalls has a sign "Cash paid for secondhand clothes", here you can sell <a href="exec:gs ''portnoi''">all of your unwanted clothes</a>.'
+	'A sign on one of the stalls says, "Cash paid for secondhand clothes"; you can sell <a href="exec:gs ''portnoi''">all your unwanted clothes here</a>.'
 	
 	
 	if arturQW = 1 and (week = 6 or week = 7) and hour < 12: act 'Wait for Arthur to arrive':hour = 12 & gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 	*nl
 	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 18:
-		'The market stalls are buzzing with shoppers. Everyone seems to be in a good mood and you can hear back and forth bargaining as you pass by.'
+		'The market stalls are buzzing with shoppers. Everyone seems to be in a good mood, and you can hear back-and-forth bargaining as you pass by.'
 		if fame['pav_slut'] >= 100 and rand(0,9) = 0:
 			menu_off = 1
 			gs 'stat'
-			'An Armenian man comes up to you and in broken Russian says, "You girl who like men, no? Come meet real men have good time."'
+			'An Armenian man comes up to you and, in broken Russian, says, "You girl who like men, no? Come meet real men, have good time."'
 			act 'Reject him':
 				*clr & cla
 				'You pretend not to understand what he is saying, smiling and shaking your head as you move away from him.'
@@ -77,8 +77,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				gobQW = 1
 				minut += 15
 				gs'stat'
-				'You stand quietly by the entrance to the market, waiting for customers and displaying your tapestries. Shortly buyers start to gather, but a large, muscular man approaches you and says, "It is illegal to trade in the market without a trader''s license, but I may be interesting in buying your tapestries, 1000 <b>₽</b> apiece. Come and see me at my stall."'
-				'Not wanting to get into trouble, you pack your stuff away. The man was already gone, but you saw which direction he went and he should be easy to find.'
+				'You stand quietly by the entrance to the market, waiting for customers and displaying your tapestries. Shortly buyers start to gather, but a large, muscular man approaches you and says, "It is illegal to trade in the market without a trader''s license, but I may be interested in buying your tapestries, 1000<b>₽</b> apiece. So come and see me at my stall."'
+				'Not wanting to get into trouble, you pack your stuff away. The man was already gone, but you saw which direction he went, and he should be easy to find.'
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 			end
 		elseif gobelen > 0 and gobQW >= 1:
@@ -87,13 +87,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 15
 				gs'stat'
-				'You go to the man who offered to buy your tapestries for 1000 <b>₽</b>. You find him by his stall, smiling.'
+				'You go to the man who offered to buy your tapestries for 1000<b>₽</b>. You find him by his stall, smiling.'
 				if gobQW = 2:
 					'Roman welcomes you. He is interested and businesslike as he asks what you have for sale.'
 				elseif gobQW = 1:
 					gobQW = 2
 					minut += 5
-					'The man greets you and introduces himself as Roman, you tell him that your name is <<$pcs_nickname>>. After a brief chat Roman says that he is interested in seeing what you have for sale.'
+					'The man greets you and introduces himself as Roman. You tell him that your name is <<$pcs_nickname>>. After a brief chat, Roman says he wants to see what you have for sale.'
 				end
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 				act'Show your tapestry':
@@ -101,13 +101,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					gobelen -= 1
 					money += 1000
 					gs'stat'
-					'You show your tapestry to Roman and he gives you five hundred for it. You take the money and give him the tapestry.'
+					'You show your tapestry to Roman, and he gives you five hundred. You take the money and give him the tapestry.'
 					act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 				end
 				if gobelen > 1:
 					act'Sell all of your tapestries':
 						*clr & cla
-						'You show Roman your tapestries and he gives you <<gobelen * 1000>> <b>₽</b> for them. You take the money and give him the tapestries.'
+						'You show Roman your tapestries, and he gives you <<gobelen * 1000>> <b>₽</b> for them. You take the money and give him the tapestries.'
 						money += gobelen * 1000
 						gobelen = 0
 						gs'stat'
@@ -123,36 +123,36 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			menu_off = 1
 			lookwine = daystart
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/chinese_stall01.jpg"></center>'
-			'You were looking through the market when you came upon a stall selling Chinese foods. On a shelf behind the old woman minding the stall there are a number of bottles.'
+			'You were looking through the market when you found a stall selling Chinese foods. There are several bottles on a shelf behind the old woman minding the stall.'
 			act 'Ask about wang-goo':
 				cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/chinese_stall01.jpg"></center>'
 				'You asked the old woman if she has any rice wine to sell. She smiles at you and points to a basket filled with rice.'
 				'"Onry 2 <b>₽</b>, hundred glam." she said in badly accented Russian, "You buy?"'
 				'"No," you reply, "I need rice wine, rice wine."'
-				'She looks at you in confusion for a moment then suddenly brightened, "Ah!" she exclaims, "Come, come!"'
-				'The old woman hurries to the other side of the stall as you follow her to where a number of smoked piglets are hung in a row.'
-				'"Here," the old woman crowed handing you one of the pigs, "Nice swine, vely nice swine."'
-				'"No, not nice swine," you sigh out in despair, "Rice! Wine."'
+				'She looks at you in confusion for a moment, then suddenly brightens, "Ah!" she exclaims, "Come, come!"'
+				'The old woman hurries to the other side of the stall as you follow her to where several smoked piglets are hung in a row.'
+				'"Here," the old woman crowed, handing you one of the pigs, "Nice swine, vely nice swine."'
+				'"No, not nice swine," you sigh in despair, "Rice! Wine."'
 				'"Yes, yes," the woman counters, "Nice swine, only 5 <b>₽</b>."'
 				*nl
-				'Just as you were about to give up, a young Chinese boy about your brother''s age arrives.'
-				'"I am sorry, my grandmother does not speak much Russian." he says as he steps beside the old woman who started to speak rapidly to him in what you assume is Chinese.'
+				'Just as you are about to give up, a young Chinese boy about your brother''s age arrives.'
+				'Just as you are about to give up, a young Chinese boy about your brother''s age arrives.'
 				'"My grandmother asks why you don''t like the piglets?" he translates as the old woman stops.'
 				'"I don''t want a pig," you reply in relief as his Russian is quite good, "I am looking for rice wine, wang-goo."'
 				'"Ah, huangjiu!" he exclaims as he turns to his grandmother and starts speaking in Chinese.'
 				'The old woman glares at you, hangs back the smoked pig and shuffles over to the shelf with the bottles. She finally picks up one of them and brings it over to you.'
-				'"Why you not say wanted rice wine." she asked in aggrieved tones, "500 <b>₽</b>."'
+				'"Why you not say wanted rice wine." she asked in aggrieved tones, "500<b>₽</b>."'
 				if money >= 500:
 					act 'Buy the wine':
 						*clr & cla
 						money -= 500
 						ricewine = 1
-						'You hand the woman the money and she gives you the wine.'
+						'You hand the woman the money, and she gives you the wine.'
 						act 'Leave': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 					end
 				else
-					'You are chocked by the high price and realize that you cannot afford the wine. You apologize and turn away.'
+					'You are shocked by the high price and realize you cannot afford the wine. You apologize and turn away.'
 					
 					act 'Leave the market': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 					
@@ -162,10 +162,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						minut += 15
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/market_boy01.jpg"></center>'
 						'You continue to wander through the market for another 15 minutes when the boy from the Chinese stall comes up to you.'
-						'"Hey, you really want that rice wine?" he asks after checking to make sure that no one is watching.'
+						'"Hey, you really want that rice wine?" he asks after checking to ensure no one is watching.'
 						'"Yes," you answer him, "But it''s too expensive. I can''t afford it."'
 						'"How about we make a deal." he says, "Go to the porn dealer and buy me a porn magazine and I''ll get you the wine."'
-						if pornmarkonce = 0: pornmarkonce = 1 & '"Where can I find the porn dealer?" you ask and he happily gives you directions.'
+						if pornmarkonce = 0: pornmarkonce = 1 & '"Where can I find the porn dealer?" you ask, and he happily gives you directions.'
 						
 						act 'Refuse':
 							'You decline his offer as he upsettingly walks away.'
@@ -202,10 +202,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				porndeal = 2 & ! to close the ricewine event
 				ricewine = 1
 				'"Do you have the wine?" you counter.'
-				'He pulls the bottle out of his backpack and you trade items.'
+				'He pulls the bottle out of his backpack, and you trade items.'
 				act 'Leave': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 			else
-				'You tell him that you haven''t had time to pick up the magazine yet but you were working on it.'
+				'You tell him you haven''t had time to pick up the magazine yet, but you were working on it.'
 				act 'Leave': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 			end 
 		elseif porndeal = 1 and ricewine ! 1 and porndealday = daystart and lookboy = 0:
@@ -214,7 +214,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			gs 'stat'
 			lookboy = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/chinese_stall01.jpg"></center>'
-			'You look around the market for the boy from the Chinese stall, but you can''t find him. You decide to look for him another day.'
+			'You look around the market for the boy from the Chinese stall, but you can''t find him. So you decide to look for him another day.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 		end
 
@@ -291,7 +291,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'events':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><h2>Market</h2></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/brodit'+rand(1,16)+'.jpg"></center>'
-	'You wander around the market taking in the sounds and colours but nothing catches your eye.'
+	'You wander around the market, taking in the sounds and colours, but nothing catches your eye.'
 	
 	act 'Stop wandering': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 18:
@@ -323,7 +323,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 1:
 		pcs_mood += 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/podaet.jpg"></center>'
-		'You give the beggar a few rubles which he kindly thanks you for.'
+		'You give the beggar a few rubles, which he kindly thanks you for.'
 		act 'Stop wandering': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 		if hour >= 8 and hour <= 18:
 			act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
@@ -354,37 +354,37 @@ if ARGS[0] = 3:
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/book.jpg"></center>'
 	end
-	'You find a stall selling various books, there are fantasy books, science fiction and romance novels, all of which costs only 350 <b>₽</b> each.'
+	'You find a stall selling various books. There are fantasy, science fiction and romance novels, all of which cost only 350<b>₽</b> each.'
 	act 'Stop wandering': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 18:
 		act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
 	end
 	if money >= 350:
-		act 'Buy a fantasy book (350 <b>₽</b>)':
+		act 'Buy a fantasy book (350<b>₽</b>)':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			money -= 350
 			f_book += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/accessories/books/fantasy' + rand(1,9) + '.jpg"></center>'
-			'You bought a fantasy book for 350 <b>₽</b>.'
+			'You bought a fantasy book for 350<b>₽</b>.'
 			act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 		end
 	end
 	if money >= 350:
-		act 'Buy a science fiction book (350 <b>₽</b>)':
+		act 'Buy a science fiction book (350<b>₽</b>)':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			money -= 350
 			f_book += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/accessories/books/scifi' + rand(1,6) + '.jpg"></center>'
-			'You bought a science ficiton book for 350 <b>₽</b>.'
+			'You bought a science ficiton book for 350<b>₽</b>.'
 			act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 		end
 	end
 	if money >= 350:
-		act 'Buy a romance novel (350 <b>₽</b>)':
+		act 'Buy a romance novel (350<b>₽</b>)':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			money -= 350
@@ -403,7 +403,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 	pavmarket_porn = 1
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pornmag.jpg"></center>'
-	'You find a small stall that has many shelves with a large variety of porn magazines, a pack of brand new porn playing cards, and you can see several sex toys just behind the counter. The salesman watches over his stall with shifty eyes.'
+	'You find a small stall with many shelves, a large variety of porn magazines, and a pack of brand-new porn playing cards. In addition, you can see several sex toys just behind the counter. The salesman watches over his stall with shifty eyes.'
 	act 'Stop wandering': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 18:
 		act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
@@ -424,7 +424,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 	end
 	if porndeal = 1:
 		if money >= 400:
-			act 'Buy a porn magazine for the Chinese boy (400 <b>₽</b>)':
+			act 'Buy a porn magazine for the Chinese boy (400<b>₽</b>)':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 5
 				money -= 400
@@ -450,7 +450,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				act 'Look through a magazine':
 					cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pornmag.jpg"></center>'
-					'You pick up one of the magazines and flip through the pages. Inside the magazines, you see men with large erect penis engaging in sexual acts with women who are either half-naked or fully naked, most of them look close to your own age. You feel yourself getting aroused looking at the images.'
+					'You pick up one of the magazines and flip through the pages. Inside the magazines, you see men with sizeable erect penis engaging in sexual acts with either half-naked or fully naked women. Most of them look close to your own age. You feel yourself getting aroused looking at the images.'
 					act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 					act 'Look for something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 					act 'Ask for the price':
@@ -458,7 +458,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 						minut += 5
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pornmag.jpg"></center>'
-						'Blushing profusely right down to your roots, you approach the porn dealer and stammeringly ask him the price on the magazines. The porn dealer smiles at you and says, "All magazines are 400 <b>₽</b> each."'
+						'Blushing profusely down to your roots, you approach the porn dealer and stammeringly ask him the price of the magazines. The porn dealer smiles at you and says, "All magazines are <b>400₽</b> each."'
 						act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 						act 'Look for something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 						if money >= 400:
@@ -470,7 +470,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 								TimesBuyPorno += 1
 								gs 'stat'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pornmag.jpg"></center>'
-								'You try not to look into the porn dealers eyes as you hand him the money. You take the magazine and quickly hide it under your shirt.'
+								'You try not to look into the porn dealer''s eyes as you hand him the money. You take the magazine and quickly hide it under your shirt.'
 								act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 								act 'Buy something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 							end
@@ -482,7 +482,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				act 'Look through a magazine':
 					cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pornmag.jpg"></center>'
-					'You pick up one of the magazines and flip through the pages. Inside the magazines, you see men with large erect penis engaging in sexual acts with women who are either half-naked or fully naked, most of them look close to your own age. You feel yourself getting aroused looking at the images.'
+					'You pick up one of the magazines and flip through the pages. Inside the magazines, you see men with sizeable erect penis engaging in sexual acts with either half-naked or fully naked women. Most of them look close to your own age. You feel yourself getting aroused looking at the images.'
 					act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 					act 'Look for something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 					if money >= 400:
@@ -494,7 +494,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 							TimesBuyPorno += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pornmag.jpg"></center>'
-							'You try not to look into the porn dealers eyes as you hand him the money. You take the magazine and quickly hide it under your shirt.'
+							'You try not to look into the porn dealer''s eyes as you hand him the money. You take the magazine and quickly hide it under your shirt.'
 							act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 							act 'Buy something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 						end
@@ -505,7 +505,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				act 'Look through a magazine':
 					cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pornmag.jpg"></center>'
-					'You pick up one of the magazines and flip through the pages. Inside the magazines, you see men with large erect penis engaging in sexual acts with women who are either half-naked or fully naked, most of them look close to your own age. You feel yourself getting aroused looking at the images.'
+					'You pick up one of the magazines and flip through the pages. Inside the magazines, you see men with sizeable erect penis engaging in sexual acts with either half-naked or fully naked women. Most of them look close to your own age. You feel yourself getting aroused looking at the images.'
 					act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 					act 'Look for something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 					if money >= 400:
@@ -517,7 +517,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 							TimesBuyPorno += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pornmag.jpg"></center>'
-							'You try not to look into the porn dealers eyes as you hand him the money. You take the magazine and quickly hide it under your shirt.'
+							'You try not to look into the porn dealer''s eyes as you hand him the money. You take the magazine and quickly hide it under your shirt.'
 							act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 							act 'Buy something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 						end
@@ -530,7 +530,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/sextoys.jpg"></center>'
-		'He lets you step behind the counter so you can get a better look, as you do he says. "Take a look and let me know what you would like." You see several 15cm dildos. Each with a tag, "Only 700 <b>₽</b> each." You also see a small selection of vibrators in various colors, mostly pink. "Only 700 <b>₽</b> each." To one side you see many butt plugs, rubber and metal. "Only 700 <b>₽</b>each." Near the bottom is several strapon harnesses without a dildo. "Only 500 <b>₽</b>each."'
+		'He lets you step behind the counter to get a better look. As you do, he says. "Take a look and let me know what you would like." You see several 15cm dildos. Each with a tag, "Only 700<b>₽</b> each." You also see a small selection of vibrators in various colours, mostly pink. "Only 700<b>₽</b> each." To one side, you see many butt plugs, rubber and metal. "Only 700<b>₽</b> each." Near the bottom are several strap-on harnesses without a dildo. "Only 500<b>₽</b> each."'
 		act 'Leave':gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 		act 'Look for something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 		if money >= 700 and middildo = 0:
@@ -543,7 +543,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				TimesBuyPorno += 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/15cm.jpg"></center>'
 				if pcs_inhib < 35:
-					'You buy a dildo and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+					'You buy a dildo and hastily hide it while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 				else
 					'You buy a dildo and calmly hide it.'
 				end
@@ -561,7 +561,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				TimesBuyPorno += 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/15cm.jpg"></center>'
 				if  pcs_inhib < 35:
-					'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+					'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 				else
 					'You buy the dildo and calmly hide it.'
 				end
@@ -569,7 +569,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				act 'Buy something else':gt 'pav_train_market', 4
 			end
 		elseif money >= 1000 and suction_dildo > 0:
-			act 'Buy another 15cm suction dildo (1000 <b>₽</b>)':
+			act 'Buy another 15cm suction dildo (1000<b>₽</b>)':
 				cla
 				minut += 5
 				suction_dildo += 1
@@ -578,7 +578,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				TimesBuyPorno += 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/15cm.jpg"></center>'
 				if  pcs_inhib < 35:
-					'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+					'You buy the dildo and hastily hide it while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 				else
 					'You buy the dildo and calmly hide it.'
 				end
@@ -587,7 +587,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 			end
 		end
 		if money >= 700 and vibrator = 0:
-			act 'Buy vibrator (700 <b>₽</b>)':
+			act 'Buy vibrator (700<b>₽</b>)':
 				cla
 				minut += 5
 				vibrator = 1
@@ -595,7 +595,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				pcs_horny += 10
 				TimesBuyPorno += 1
 				if pcs_horny >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 150:
-					'You buy a vibrator and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+					'You buy a vibrator and hastily hide it while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 				else
 					'You buy a vibrator and calmly hide it.'
 				end
@@ -604,7 +604,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 			end
 		end
 		if money >= 700 and analplug = 0:
-			act 'Buy butt plug (700 <b>₽</b>)':
+			act 'Buy butt plug (700<b>₽</b>)':
 				cla
 				minut += 5
 				money -= 700
@@ -614,7 +614,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 				TimesBuyPorno += 1
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/bp_small.jpg"></center>'
 				if pcs_horny >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 150:
-					'You buy a butt plug and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+					'You buy a butt plug and hastily hide it while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 				else
 					'You buy a butt plug and calmly hide it.'
 				end
@@ -624,7 +624,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 		end
 		if middildo > 0:
 			if money >= 500 and strapon = 0:
-				act 'Buy strap-on harness (500 <b>₽</b>)':
+				act 'Buy strap-on harness (500<b>₽</b>)':
 					cla
 					minut += 5
 					strapon = 1
@@ -634,7 +634,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 					TimesBuyPorno += 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/harness.jpg"></center>'
 					if pcs_horny >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 150:
-						'You buy a strap-on harness and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+						'You buy a strap-on harness and hastily hide it while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 					else
 						'You buy a strap-on harness and calmly hide it.'
 					end
@@ -644,7 +644,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 			end
 		else
 			if money >= 1200 and strapon = 0 and middildo = 0:
-				act 'Buy strap-on harness with a 15cm dildo (1200 <b>₽</b>)':
+				act 'Buy strap-on harness with a 15cm dildo (1200<b>₽</b>)':
 					cla
 					minut += 5
 					strapon = 1
@@ -655,7 +655,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 4:
 					TimesBuyPorno += 1
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/pc/items/sextoys/harness.jpg"></center>'
 					if pcs_horny >= 50 and fame['pav_slut'] < 150:
-						'You buy a strap-on harness and hastily hide it, while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
+						'You buy a strap-on harness and hastily hide it while your face blushes with embarrassment.'
 					else
 						'You buy a strap-on harness and calmly hide it.'
 					end
@@ -692,14 +692,14 @@ if ARGS[0] = 6:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut += 5
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/gadaet'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'You agree and Gypsy takes your hand before she predicts you will have great happiness and lots of money. Afterwards, she promptly walks away.'
+		'You agree, and Gypsy takes your hand before she predicts you will have great happiness and lots of money. Afterwards, she promptly walks away.'
 		act 'Something''s wrong':
 			*clr & cla
 			money = 0
 			pcs_mood -= 50
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/pusto.jpg"></center>'
-			'With a sneaking suspicion you start looking through your stuff. Your wallet is nowhere to be found!'
+			'With a sneaking suspicion, you start looking through your stuff. Unfortunately, your wallet is nowhere to be found!'
 			act 'Find the Gypsy':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/okliknut.jpg"></center>'
@@ -723,7 +723,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 7:
 		act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
 	end
 	if money >= tovpay:
-		act 'Buy the cosmetics (800 <b>₽</b>)':
+		act 'Buy the cosmetics (800<b>₽</b>)':
 			minut += 15
 			money -= tovpay
 			kosmetica += 50
@@ -745,7 +745,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 8:
 		act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
 	end
 	if money >= tovpay:
-		act 'Buy vitamins (105 <b>₽</b>)':
+		act 'Buy vitamins (105<b>₽</b>)':
 			minut += 15
 			vitamin += 20
 			money -= tovpay
@@ -767,7 +767,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 9:
 		act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
 	end
 	if money >= tovpay:
-		act 'Buy condoms (80 <b>₽</b>)':
+		act 'Buy condoms (80<b>₽</b>)':
 			minut += 15
 			prezik += 5
 			i = 5
@@ -794,7 +794,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 10:
 		act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
 	end
 	if money >= tovpay:
-		act 'Buy lip balm (100 <b>₽</b>)':
+		act 'Buy lip balm (100<b>₽</b>)':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 15
 			lipbalm += 30
@@ -811,10 +811,10 @@ if ARGS[0] = 11:
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/arthur/artur.jpg"></center>'
 	if arturKnow = 0:
-		'Someone suddenly calls out to you, "Hey pretty girl, do you want a fresh, juicy tangerine?"'
+		'Someone suddenly calls out, "Hey, pretty girl, do you want a fresh, juicy tangerine?"'
 		act 'Look': gt 'arturRinok','start'
 	else
-		'Someone suddenly calls out to you, "Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>, do you want a fresh, juicy tangerine?"'
+		'Someone suddenly calls out, "Hey, <<$pcs_nickname>>, do you want a fresh, juicy tangerine?"'
 		act 'Go and see Arthur': gt 'arturRinok','start'
 	end
 end
@@ -843,7 +843,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 12:
 			minut+=10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/eat.jpg"></center>'
-			'The pie is still warm as the woman hands it over to you. Barely able to keep yourself away from it, you find a place to sit down and enjoy the pie.'
+			'The pie is still warm as the woman hands it over to you. Then, barely able to keep yourself away from it, you find a place to sit and enjoy the pie.'
 			act 'Continue walking through the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
 		end
 	else
@@ -863,7 +863,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 13:
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/vernutwallet.jpg"></center>'
-		'You call to the woman and hold out her wallet. She looks at you and releasing she gratefully takes her wallet back and walks away.'
+		'You call the woman and hold out her wallet. She looks at you and, realising, gratefully takes her wallet back and walks away.'
 		act 'Continue walking through the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
 	end
 	act 'Look through the purse':
@@ -872,7 +872,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 13:
 		gs 'stat'
 		i = rand(40,200)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/zaglanut.jpg"></center>'
-		'You open the wallet and you see that there''s <<i>> <b>₽</b>'
+		'You open the wallet and you see that there''s <<i>><b>₽</b>'
 
 		gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'self', 'easy'
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -895,7 +895,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 13:
 			pcs_mood += 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/proverka.jpg"></center>'
-			'You catch up with the woman and telling her she dropped something you hand her the purse. The woman checks her money is still there and seeing that everything is in place, she thanks you and walked away.'
+			'You catch up with the woman, and telling her she dropped something, you hand her the purse. The woman checks that her money is still there, and seeing everything in place, she thanks you and walks away.'
 			act 'Stop wandering': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 			if hour >= 8 and hour <= 18:
 				act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
@@ -949,7 +949,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 17:
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/meatlavka.jpg"></center>'
-	'You wander past a the meet seller and see a butcher working with an axe.'
+	'You wander past the meat seller and see a butcher working with an axe.'
 	act 'Stop wandering': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 18:
 		act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'
@@ -962,7 +962,7 @@ if ARGS[0] = 18:
 	minut += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/market/dirka.jpg"></center>'
-	'As you walk past a stall you notice a small hole torn in the canvas.'
+	'As you walk past a stall, you notice a small hole torn in the canvas.'
 	act 'Stop wandering': gt 'pav_train_market', 'start'
 	if hour >= 8 and hour <= 18:
 		act 'Wander around the market': gt 'pav_train_market','events'