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Gave the ugly files some love so they're a bit prettier to read.

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+ 8 - 8
locations/Nudelake.qsrc

@@ -11,7 +11,7 @@ $location_type = 'secluded'
 
 '<center><b>nudist beach</b></center>'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/nudelake.jpg"></center>'
-'The nudist beach - clothing optional.'
+'The nudist beach, where clothing is optional.'
 
 if PCloswimwear = 1 or $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 	act'Get dressed':
@@ -35,8 +35,8 @@ if temper >= 15 and month >= 5 and month <= 9:
 			minut+=5
 			if pcs_horny >= 90:
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/secluded_beach/self/wetpussypants1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You want to change into a swimsuit, but with no changing room here and your pussy oozing juices down your leg coupled with the thought that people will see, horrifies you. You abandon the idea.'
-				'"I should sort out my arousal first." You think to yourself.'
+				'You want to change into a swimsuit, but with no changing room here and your pussy oozing juices down your leg, coupled with the thought that people will see, horrifies you. You abandon the idea.'
+				'"I should sort out my arousal first." you think to yourself.'
 
 				act'Continue':gt'Nudelake'
 			else
@@ -60,7 +60,7 @@ if temper >= 15 and month >= 5 and month <= 9:
 				gs 'clothing', 'strip_all'
 				if pcs_horny >= 80 and exhibitionist_lvl > 1:
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/secluded_beach/self/wetpussypants3.jpg"></center>'
-					'You strip off. A couple of passing men do a double-take and pause a moment to look at your sopping wet panties, probably thinking about what is making you so excited. You don''t care about what they might say or think of you.'
+					'You strip off. A few passing men do a double-take and pause to look at your sopping wet panties, probably thinking about what is making you so excited. You don''t care about what they might say or think of you.'
 				elseif pcs_inhib >= 60:
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/secluded_beach/dress/undressnudebeach.jpg"></center>'
 					'Not caring if anyone is looking at you, you slowly take off your clothes. You peel off each item like a stripper. Soon, you are completely naked.'
@@ -72,7 +72,7 @@ if temper >= 15 and month >= 5 and month <= 9:
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/lake/secluded_beach/self/shyness.jpg"></center>'
-				'Even though no one is around, you don''t feel confident enough to actually take your clothes off. What if someone would see you nude?'
+				'Even though no one is around, you don''t feel confident enough to actually take your clothes off.'
 			end
 			act'Continue':gt'Nudelake'
 		end
@@ -84,8 +84,8 @@ if hour >= 6 and hour <= 20 and temper >= 15:
 	if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 		'Here you can <a href="exec:gt ''Nudelake'', ''zagarat''">sunbathe</a> and <a href="exec:gt ''Nudelake'', ''swim''">swim</a>'
 		act 'Go swimming': gt 'Nudelake', 'swim'
-		act 'Go sunbathe': gt 'Nudelake', 'zagarat'
-		'Also, you can play <a href="exec:gt ''Nudelake'', ''voleybol''">beach volleyball</a>'
+		act 'Sunbathe': gt 'Nudelake', 'zagarat'
+		'You can play <a href="exec:gt ''Nudelake'', ''voleybol''">beach volleyball</a>.'
 	end
 elseif hour >= 6 and hour <= 20:
 	'It''s too cold for any nudist activities.'
@@ -131,7 +131,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'voleybol':
 		minut += 30
 		inhib_exp += rand(1,3)
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/lake/volleyball.jpg"></center>'
-		'You go up to the players and ask whether it is possible to join in, they are happy to put you on a team.'
+		'You go up to the players and ask whether it is possible to join in. They are happy to put you on a team.'
 
 		act 'Finish':gt 'Nudelake'
 	end

+ 17 - 18
locations/albina_chat.qsrc

@@ -107,8 +107,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'chat':
 						'"He''s friends with my sister. She invited me to his party and that''s where we met." You proceed to talk about the night you met him and your first date, Albina being strangely engrossed in your story.'
 					else
 						'"<<$boyfriend>>..." you reply.'
-						'"Who?" she asks, a confused look on her face.'
-						'You shake your head. "You''ve never meet him. I only just met him."'
+						'"Who?" she asks with a confused look on her face.'
+						'You shake your head. "You won''t know him. I only just met him."'
 						'"Some random guy you just bumped into? I''m sure that will end well..." she sarcastically quips before you tell her about him and how you met.'
 					end
 					act 'Change the subject': gt 'albina_chat', 'chat'
@@ -127,7 +127,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'chat':
 			act 'Continue':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-				'"It made her uncomfortable and after she ended up pregnant with me, things just got worse. My father never wanted children, so they argued constantly after I was born. She ended up divorcing him when I was 8 years old after she found out about the 18 year old gold digging stripper whore who was sucking his dick every chance she got. She stormed out on him and never looked back. Like I said before, he used his influence to stop her taking me with her and fed me lies about her abandoning me, but we remained in secret contact behind his back for all these years. She knows of his shady dealings, but she doesn''t know about the... thing with the Starlets. It would break her heart if she found out and she would blame herself, so please don''t mention anything to her.' 
+				'"It made her uncomfortable and after she ended up pregnant with me, things just got worse. My father never wanted children, so they argued constantly after I was born. She ended up divorcing him when I was 8 years old after she found out about the 18 year old gold digging stripper whore who was sucking his dick every chance she got. She stormed out on him and never looked back. Like I said before, he used his influence to stop her taking me with her and fed me lies about her abandoning me, but we remained in secret contact behind his back for all these years. She knows of his many shady dealings, including that he ran an illegal prostitution ring, but she doesn''t know that the girls were... us. It would break her heart if she found out and she would blame herself, so please don''t mention anything to her.' 
 				'Anyway, she went to Moscow and finally got into university, where she earned her degree before she moved back here and got her dream job working at a hospital in the city, right under his nose. She''s looking into getting me into uni myself." she says with a warm smile and a twinkle in her eye. You''ve never seen her look so... happy before.'
 				'She turns to you. "So what about you? What do you want to do after school?" she asks warmly.'
 				act 'I don''t know':
@@ -165,7 +165,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'chat':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 						'You sigh in a way only those who are in love can. "Hopefully <<$boyfriend_temp>> and I can get married soon."'
-						'She gives you a somewhat skeptical look, then shrugs. "Best of luck with that, I guess. Relationships are something I''m avoiding. I''m happy being single and just hooking up for casual sex."'
+						'She gives you a somewhat skeptical look, then shrugs. "Best of luck with that, I guess. I''m happy just hooking up for casual sex. Relationships can suck it."'
 						'You''re not sure what more to say on the topic, so change the subject.'
 						killvar '$boyfriend_temp'
 						act 'Change the subject': gt 'albina_chat', 'chat'
@@ -180,7 +180,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'chat':
 		!!'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 		!!'You look around and notice her expensive looking clothes hanging up in her huge wall-to-wall closet. Even the underwear you''ve seen her wearing looks fancy. You''re curious about where she gets her clothes since it''s obvious she doesn''t get them locally. Not even the expensive stores in the city mall sell some of the things you see. "Where do you buy your clothes? Online?"'
 		!!'"Pretty much. I buy what I like the look of when I''m shopping in the city, but most of my clothes are personally imported from Europe and America."'
-		!!'You wish you could afford such nice clothes, but admit to yourself that buying imported stuff is way out of your price range. Albina notices you thinking to yourself and smiles. "Don''t look so glum <<$pcs_nickname>>. Mon Cheri, the boutique in the mall, has a ton of stuff you can buy. Tell you what, I''m going there at the weekend with my mother. Come by and we can go together, yeah?"'
+		!!'You wish you could afford such nice clothes, but admit to yourself that buying imported stuff is way out of your price range. Albina notices you thinking to yourself and smiles. "Don''t look so glum <<$pcs_nickname>>. Mon Cheri, the boutique in the mall, has a ton of stuff you can buy. Tell you what, I''m going there at the weekend. Come by and we can go together, yeah?"'
 		!!act 'Accept':
 			!!AlbinaQW['Go_Shopping'] = 1
 			!!*clr & cla
@@ -223,8 +223,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Cowgirl':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 	'Definitely cowgirl. I love getting on top and taking control." you admit.'
 	'She smiles in response. "Oh, so little <<$pcs_nickname>> here likes riding dick? Who knew?" she says teasingly and you gently punch her arm. "Well, what about you?" you ask.'
-	'"Doggystyle." she says without hesitation. "Getting bent over and having a guy just grab me and pound my holes is such a turn on for me." she admits before tightly closing her legs and biting her lip. "It''s even better when he plays with my ass as he fucks me." You are surprised by her graphic answer and find yourself a little turned on by it.'
-	act 'Ask her about her sex life instead': gt 'albina_chat', 'Anal'
+	'"Doggystyle." she says without hesitation. "Getting bent over and having my holes pounded is such a turn on for me." she admits before tightly closing her legs and biting her lip. "It''s even better when they spank me at the same time. The harder, the better." You are surprised by her graphic answer and find yourself a little turned on by it.'
+	act 'Ask her about her anal fetish': gt 'albina_chat', 'Anal'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'Doggystyle':
@@ -233,8 +233,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Doggystyle':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 	'"I like doggystyle. Getting fucked from behind, it turns me on just thinking about it." you admit.'
-	'Albina gives you a wide smile. "That''s my girl!" she says slyly. "Getting bent over and having a guy just grab me and pound my holes is my favourite too!" she admits while she tightly closes her legs and bites her lip. "It''s even better when he plays with my ass as he fucks me." You giggle at her answer and find yourself a little turned on.'
-	act 'Ask her about her sex life instead': gt 'albina_chat', 'Anal'
+	'Albina gives you a wide smile. "That''s my girl!" she says slyly. "Getting bent over and having my holes pounded is my favourite too!" she admits while she tightly closes her legs and bites her lip. "Especially when they spank me at the same time. The harder, the better." You giggle at her answer and find yourself a little turned on.'
+	act 'Ask her about her anal fetish': gt 'albina_chat', 'Anal'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'Missionary':
@@ -243,9 +243,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Missionary':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 	'Missionary." you admit. "There''s just something...nice about it."'
-	'"BO-RING!" she says in response. "Have a guy bend you over and pound you from behind while playing with your ass and tell me that lying on your back doing nothing is ''nice''. Doggystyle is the way to go!" she adds with a laugh. You notice her tightly closing her legs and biting her lip as she speaks.'
+	'"BO-RING!" she says in response. "Bend over and get pounded and spanked from behind and tell me that lying on your back doing nothing is ''nice''. Doggystyle is the way to go!" she adds with a laugh. You notice her tightly closing her legs and biting her lip as she speaks.'
 	'You both agree to disagree, but find yourself a little turned on by her comment.'
-	act 'Ask her about her sex life instead': gt 'albina_chat', 'Anal'
+	act 'Ask her about her anal fetish': gt 'albina_chat', 'Anal'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'Anal':
@@ -254,11 +254,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Anal':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 	'You''re curious about her anal fetish and now seems like a good time to ask. "So..." you sheepishly ask. "What is it, you like, about...anal?"
-	She glares at you for a few seconds before answering. 
-	"And why do you want to know?"'
+	She glares at you for a few seconds before answering. "And why do you want to know?"'
 	'You stutter, flustered by her response. "Oh, it''s just...you know there''s...stuff going around school about you?"'
 	'Oh I know all about that. "Albina is just a cheap butt slut whore.", "I bet Albina''s asshole is looser than Lizeveta''s lips!", "I would fuck Albina''s asshole while slapping her juicy cheeks like I''m playing some bongos!", "I bet her pussy is tighter than a nun''s with all the anal she does." I''ve heard them all, but none of the perverted fucking cowards dare mention them in front of me. To answer your question, I''m not going to. I don''t need to explain my sex life to anyone." She then turns away and goes quiet.'
-	'You''ve clearly hit a nerve and know better than to anger her further, so you change the subject.'
+	'You''ve clearly hit a nerve and know better than to push her further, so you change the subject.'
 	act 'Change the subject': gt 'albina_chat', 'chat'
 	act 'Stop talking': gt 'albinahome', 'bedroom'
 end
@@ -268,7 +267,7 @@ end
 !!	gs 'stat'
 !!	*clr & cla
 !!	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
-!!	'You blush as you answer.  "Uhhh...You."'
+!!	'You blush as you answer. "Uhhh...You."'
 !!	'She raises her brow. "Really? Me?" she replies and you nod.'
 !!	'"Yeah, you. You eat pussy like a pro and know your way around using a strap on. You would make a pretty decent guy if I''m honest."'
 !!	'She seems surprised by your answer, but accepts your compliment anyway. "You''re pretty good yourself." she says with a wink and a slight hint of arousal.'
@@ -277,10 +276,10 @@ end
 !!		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/albinatalk.jpg"></center>'
 !!		'So what was your best?" you ask in turn.'
 !!		'She smiles. "It was this girl I met at a nightclub in the city. Long story short, I have a fake ID and you already know the police don''t question me. Anyway, I saw this cute girl at the bar. I can''t remember her name, but she said she worked in some BBQ place in the city. We had a few drinks together and ended up back at her place. I was expecting some good pussy on pussy action, but I can''t help but notice the bulge under her little dress..."'
-!!		'You raise a brow and she smiles. "Yeah, it''s what you think it was. She pulls up her dress and out springs this massive, rock hard fucking cock! I''m just standing there staring at it, so she pushes me down to my knees in front of her and I just start jerking and sucking it. After that, she threw me onto the bed, pulled my thong off and rammed it right into my pussy. My <i>god</i>, the sex we had was <i>amazing</i>, especially when she fucked me from behind and was pulling my hair and slapping my ass. I don''t know how many times she made me cum, but she made me <i>cum</i>.'
-!!		'After fucking me silly, she makes me deepthroat her as deep as I can go before she cums down my throat. She made me swallow the rest and we just snuggled in bed afterwards. I fell asleep right there in her arms as she stroked my hair. She had already left to go to the gym by the time I woke up and I never seen her again. It''s the best sex I''ve ever fucking had. I still get horny just thinking about it." she says and softly bites her lip. "Don''t tell Mama though. She wouldn''t like me going all the way to the city that late at night and coming home in the morning hungover." she adds.'
+!!		'You raise a brow and she smiles. "Yeah, it''s what you think it was. She pulls up her dress and out springs this massive, rock hard fucking cock! I''m just standing there staring at it, so she pushes me down to my knees in front of her and I just start jerking and sucking it before she makes me deepthroat her as deep as I can go. After that, she threw me onto the bed, pulled my thong off and rammed it right into my pussy. My <i>god</i>, the sex we had was <i>amazing</i>, especially when she fucked me from behind and was pulling my hair and slapping my ass. I don''t know how many times she made me cum, but she made me <i>cum</i>.'
+!!		'She fucked me silly and next thing I know I feel her cum pouring into my pussy. I was too exhausted to say anything, but I''m on the pill anyway so I didn''t mind. We snuggled in bed afterwards and I fell asleep right there in her arms as she stroked my hair. She had already left by the time I woke up and I never seen her again. It''s the best sex I''ve ever fucking had and I still get horny just thinking about it." she says and softly bites her lip. "Don''t tell Mama though. She wouldn''t like me going all the way to the city that late at night and coming home in the morning hungover having clearly hooked up with a stranger." she adds.'
 !!		'You feel yourself getting turned on by her story and picture it in your head as you imagine yourself in her position. She snaps you out of it and you decide to do something else.'
-!!		act 'Change the Subject': gt 'albina_chat', 'chat'
+!!		act 'Change the subject': gt 'albina_chat', 'chat'
 !!		act 'Stop talking': gt 'albinahome', 'bedroom'
 !!	end
 !!end

+ 4 - 4
locations/albina_house_events.qsrc

@@ -62,7 +62,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						'She sits in silence before quietly nodding. "However, I wasn''t earning enough for him. That''s when he discovered my dance troupe and forced me to start selling my friends instead. I had to <<$pcs_nickname>>! I had to!" she tearfully exclaims.'
 						'"I was forced to let those fucking perverts do whatever they pleased with my friends <<$pcs_nickname>>! They were humiliated, abused and degraded for some fucking rubles! Rubles that the fucking bastard spent on his own whores that he mistreated instead of his campaign!' 
 						*nl
-						'The creep even hired the youngest and most attractive maid he could find just so he could fulfill his fantasy of having sex with one. The worst thing about it? She fucking enjoyed it and even encouraged him! I still have nightmares of when I was 9 and I stumbled into his room when they were having sex..." She shudders heavily before continuing. "I grew up having to listen to them fuck like rabbits, so the first thing Mama did when she got here was fire that disgusting fucking whore. I gave her an ''honest'' reference as a parting gift."'
+						'The creep even hired the youngest and most attractive maid he could find just so he could fulfill his fantasy of having sex with one. The worst thing about it? She fucking enjoyed it and even encouraged him! I still have nightmares of when I was younger and stumbled into his room when they were having sex..." She shudders heavily before continuing. "I grew up having to listen to them fuck like rabbits, so the first thing Mama did when she got here was fire that disgusting fucking whore. I gave her an ''honest'' reference as a parting gift."'
                         !! if virgin or not
 						if pcs_vag = 0 and stat['vaginal'] = 0: 
 						'"Anyway, that''s why I didn''t get you involved in any of this. Too many of my friends have to hide the fact that those bastards were their first time and I wasn''t going to let it happen again with you. What he did to me though..." Tears are streaming down her cheeks at this point.'
@@ -205,7 +205,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swim_winter1':
 		'Alibna smirks at you. "Not swimming, just a quick dip! Just long enough to get your nipples rock hard."'
 		'"And <i>why</i> would I want to do that?"'
 		'"So you can jump in the hot tub after!" She looks at you pointedly. "What, you mean you''ve never jumped in the lake before a sauna session before? Don''t you know anything about enjoying yourself <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
-		'She drops her robe, revealing absolutely no clothing but for a skimpy bikini thong and starts strutting towards the back door. Opening it up, she shudders as a cold wind blows over her before glancing back at you. "Well? You coming or what?"'
+		'She drops her robe, revealing that she''s wearing only a skimpy bikini thong as she starts strutting towards the back door. Opening it up, she shudders as a cold wind blows over her before glancing back at you. "Well? You coming or what?"'
 	else
 		'"<<$pcs_nickname>>! I didn''t know you were here! I was just going to go jump in the pool. You coming?"'
 		'"And hot tub after?" you ask.'
@@ -245,7 +245,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'winter_hot_tub':
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/albinahome/hottub.jpg"></center>'
 		'You strip out of your clothes and pad over to join Albina in the hot tub, shivering the whole way. Starting with your toes, you carefully slip in across from Albina, hissing and sighing at the intense heat.'
-		'She gives you smirk that somehow also conveys a sense of superiority and disappointment.'
+		'She gives you a smirk that somehow also conveys a sense of superiority and disappointment.'
 		'"You don''t even know what you''re missing," she shakes her head, relaxing back into the tub.'
 	end
 	act 'Relax':
@@ -752,7 +752,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'computer':
 		
 	elseif AlbinaQW['CompUse'] > 0:
 		*clr & cla
-		'You decide to use Albina''s laptop while she''s gone, despite knowing she would be upset at you for you doing so. You boot it up and are a little surprised to find that such a private person wouldn''t have a password on her laptop.'
+		'You decide to use Albina''s laptop while she''s gone, despite knowing she would be upset at you doing so. You boot it up and are a little surprised to find that such a private person wouldn''t have a password on her laptop.'
 		act 'Turn it off':gt 'albinahome','bedroom'
 		act 'Go online': gt 'Komp', 'start'
 		act 'Check out her porn':

+ 33 - 35
locations/bedrPar.qsrc

@@ -25,14 +25,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		elseif analplug = 1 and analplugin = 0 and motherQW['seen_plug'] ! 1 and rand(1,3) = 1:
 			gt 'mother', 'plug_find'
 		else
-			'As you walk into your bedroom you find your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> cleaning the room. Sweeping, folding clothes and putting them away, dusting, making the beds and just generally cleaning everything.'
+			'You walk into your bedroom and find your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> sweeping and dusting the room, folding clothes and putting them away and making the beds.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'korrPar'
 		end
 	elseif ParrotQW['Level'] = 2:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
-		'As soon as you enter the room you rush over to <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage and pour the contents of the vial in to his water bowl.'
-		'You really hope this will work and keep him from spilling yours and your sister''s bedroom secrets.'
+		'As soon as you enter the room you rush over to <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage and pour the contents of the vial into his water bowl.'
+		'You hope this will work and keep him from spilling you and your sister''s bedroom secrets.'
 		ParrotQW['Level'] = 3
 		ParrotQW['Day'] = 3
 		
@@ -40,8 +40,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	elseif ParrotQW['SisterReleaseParrotDay'] + 3 < daystart and ParrotQW['Level'] = 1:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
-		'When you enter the room you notice <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage is open and he is gone.'
-		'Your sister must have released him since you were not able to find a solution in time.'
+		'When you enter the room, you notice <<$ParrotQW[''Name'']>>''s cage is open and he is gone.'
+		'Anya must have released him since you weren''t able to find a solution in time.'
 		ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 0
 		ParrotQW['Level'] = 0
 		ParrotQW['Day'] = 2
@@ -59,14 +59,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-		'"What is that?" your sister asks while pointing at <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> in his cage.'
-		'"I went to the shopping center and bought this bird. Isn''t he the cutest?"'
+		'"What is that?" Anya asks while pointing at <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> in his cage.'
+		'"I went to the mall and bought this bird. Isn''t he the cutest?"'
 		if npc_rel['A33'] > 50:
 			'"Not really, but I can see this is something you really want. As long as he doesn''t make too much noise, I don''t really care."'
 			ParrotQW['SisKeepParrot'] = 1
 		end
 		if npc_rel['A33']  <= 50:
-			'"No he isn''t cute, and I suggest you get it out of here. I am not sharing my room with a bird!"'
+			'"No he isn''t cute, and I suggest you get it out of here. I''m not sharing my room with a bird!"'
 			'You are somewhat upset, but you understand. You should have asked her before buying it.'
 			'You go to the window, open it and release the bird.'
 			ParrotQW['Owned2'] = 0
@@ -96,14 +96,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			elseif daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 35: 
 				'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$pcs_nickname>> very pretty!</b>"'
 			elseif daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 40: 
-				'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$pcs_nickname>> great body!</b>"'
+				'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Great body, <<$pcs_nickname>>!</b>"'
 			elseif daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 50: 
-				'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b><<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>>, you''re the best!</b>"'
+				'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>You''re the best, Anya!</b>"'
 			elseif daystart - ParrotQW['BuyDate'] <= 55: 
-				'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Yeah <<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>>, swallow it all!</b>"'
+				'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Yeah, that''s it Anya! Swallow it all!</b>"'
 			else
 				if ParrotQW['Level'] < 3: 
-					'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Yeah <<$npc_firstname[''A33'']>>, your pussy tastes great!</b>"'
+					'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>Your pussy tastes great, Anya!</b>"'
 				else
 					parfixrand = rand(0,9)
 					if parfixrand = 0:'When <<$ParrotQW[''Name2'']>> sees you, he starts ''speaking''. He is saying "<b>What did you say to me?</b>"'
@@ -151,24 +151,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_6_<<rand(1,7)>>.jpg"></center>'
-				'Drunk and disheveled, Anya bursts into the room.'
-				'You notice that her hair, and all her clothes are smeared in sticky sperm.'
-				'In this state, she falls on the bed and instantly falls asleep.'
+				'Anya bursts into the room, drunk and disheveled. You notice that her hair and clothes are covered in cum, but she doesn''t seem to care as she falls onto her bed and instantly falls asleep.'
 				sisboyparty = 1
 				act 'Move away': gt $loc
 			else
 				sisterdialog = 1
 
 				if anyaloc = 1:
-					'Your sister <a href="exec:gt ''sistersleep'', ''sister_sleep''">Anya</a> is asleep in her bed.'
+					'<a href="exec:gt ''sistersleep'', ''sister_sleep''">Anya</a> is asleep in her bed.'
 				elseif anyaloc = 4:
 					sisterdialog = 3
 					sisterHere = 1
-					'Your sister <a href="exec:gt ''sister_chat'', ''sister_chat''">Anya</a> is getting ready to go out.'
+					'<a href="exec:gt ''sister_chat'', ''sister_chat''">Anya</a> is getting ready to go out.'
 				elseif anyaloc = 15:
 					if anyaQW['bathroom_dildos'] > 0:gt'sister_chat','bathroom_dildo_talk1'
 					sisterHere = 1
-					'Your sister <a href="exec:gt ''sister_chat'', ''sister_chat''">Anya</a> is sitting on her bed, reading a book.'
+					'<a href="exec:gt ''sister_chat'', ''sister_chat''">Anya</a> is sitting on her bed, reading a book.'
 				elseif anyaloc = 26:
 					if sisboypartyQW = 1: sisboypartyQW = 2
 					if sisboyparty = -1: sisboyparty = 1
@@ -239,7 +237,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 			end	
 			if newgobelen>=1:
 				'Your tapestry is <<newgobelen/10>> percent finished.'
-				act'Work on the tapestry for an hour':
+				act'Work on the tapestry':
 					*clr & cla
 					menu_off = 1
 					minut+=60
@@ -276,7 +274,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 
 		if ml_online['account'] = 0 and internet > 0:
-			act 'Set up an online music account (0:30)': gt 'music_onlinemusic', 'setupAccount'
+			act 'Set up an online music account': gt 'music_onlinemusic', 'setupAccount'
 		end
 
 		!!Uploading recorded music if there are any not uploaded yet
@@ -308,12 +306,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		if hour > 8 and hour < 22:
 
 			if ml_guitar['hasguitar'] = 1:
-				act 'Play something on the guitar (10 minutes)':
+				act 'Play something on the guitar':
 					pcs_mood += 10
 					minut += 10
 					gs 'stat'
 					'You pick up your guitar and start to play some songs you know, just for your own entertainment.'
-					'You hum along the tune, relaxing into the music, just enjoying it. When you look up about 10 minutes has passed and you are in a much better mood.'
+					'You hum along to the tune, relaxing into the music and enjoying it. When you look up, 10 minutes has passed and you are in a much better mood.'
 				end
 			end
 
@@ -329,7 +327,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					gs 'willpower', 'skill', 'self', $diff
 					will_cost = (will_cost * 3) - (pcs_perform)
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-						act 'Practice guitar (0:30) (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+						act 'Practice guitar (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 							inhib_exp += rand(1,2)
 							gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -339,7 +337,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 						act 'Practice guitar (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You feel too embarrassed to pick up your guitar in front of people</font>'
 					end
 				else
-					act 'Practice guitar (0:30)': gt 'music_bedroomPractice', 'guitar'
+					act 'Practice guitar': gt 'music_bedroomPractice', 'guitar'
 				end
 			end
 
@@ -384,14 +382,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 					gs 'willpower', 'skill', 'self', $diff
 
 					if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-						act 'Record a song with your phone (0:30) (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+						act 'Record a song with your phone (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 							inhib_exp += rand(1,2)
 							gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 							gs 'stat'
 							gt 'music_onlinemusic', 'recordSong'
 						end
 						if komp = 1 and webcamera = 1 and ml_studio['scarlet-3rd-gen'] = 1:
-							act 'Record and edit a song (2:00) (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
+							act 'Record and edit a song (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
 								inhib_exp += rand(1,2)
 								gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'self'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -399,13 +397,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = '' or $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 							end
 						end
 					else
-						act 'Record a song (0:30) (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
-						act 'Record and edit a song (1:30) (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+						act 'Record a song (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+						act 'Record and edit a song (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 					end
 				else
-					act 'Record a song with your phone (0:30)': gt 'music_onlinemusic', 'recordSong'
+					act 'Record a song with your phone': gt 'music_onlinemusic', 'recordSong'
 					if komp = 1 and webcamera = 1 and ml_studio['scarlet-3rd-gen'] = 1:
-						act 'Record and edit a song (2:00)': gt 'music_onlinemusic', 'recordAndEditSong'
+						act 'Record and edit a song': gt 'music_onlinemusic', 'recordAndEditSong'
 					end
 				end
 			end
@@ -452,16 +450,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 		'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
 		'You tiredly open your eyes and see your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> standing over you. "Fifteen more minutes..." you mumble.'
-		'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> lets out a loud sigh, "No, up now!" she says as she yanks the covers off...'
+		'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> lets out a loud sigh. "No, up now!" she says as she yanks the covers off.'
 		'"<<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>>!" you exclaim as you feel a slightly cold breeze hit your body.'
-		'"No excuses <<$pcs_nickname>>. The summer holidays will be over before you know it and you mustn''t get used to sleeping in, or you won''t be able to get up early when school starts again. So, from now on set your alarm to wake up at a reasonable time." <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she stares at you expectantly.'
+		'"No excuses <<$pcs_nickname>>. The summer holidays will be over before you know it and you mustn''t get used to sleeping in, otherwise you won''t be able to get up early when school starts again. From now on, set your alarm to wake up at a reasonable time." your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she stares at you expectantly.'
 		act 'Get up':
 			cla & *clr
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost4.jpg"></center>'
-			'As soon as you get off your now coverless bed, your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> is quick to resume her nagging, telling you again what you already heard from her a few moments ago. "Summer is no excuse to laze around all day. You can''t sleep in anymore, not even for another fifteen minutes." She''s not even looking at you while she talks, but luckily for you that means she misses you rolling your eyes.'
+			'As soon as you get off your now coverless bed, your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> is quick to resume her nagging, repeating what you already heard from her a few moments ago. "Summer is no excuse to laze around all day. You can''t sleep in anymore, not even for another fifteen minutes." She''s not even looking at you while she talks, but luckily for you that means she misses you rolling your eyes.'
 			'"What are you going to do when school starts, or when you get a job? You better get into the habit of setting your alarm so you can wake up bright and early."'
 			act 'Continue':
 				cla & *clr
@@ -469,7 +467,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
-				'You let out an exasperated sigh. "Yeah, yeah I know, you told me that already. So, how early are we talking?"'
+				'You let out an exasperated sigh. "Yeah yeah I know, you told me that already. So how early are we talking?"'
 				'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> shoots you a sharp look and you know to fix your attitude or else. "Well, that depends on what you plan to do in the morning. There''s breakfast, showering and brushing your teeth, doing your hair and then makeup and shaving if you really need to. If I remember right... Anya used to wake up at 06:00 for school."'
 				act 'Continue':
 					cla & *clr
@@ -485,7 +483,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'intro':
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Your Bedroom</font></h1></center>'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/mom/prost5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Before you can finish, she cuts you off. "I''m not going to have you running around town like so many of those other girls I see! Opening their legs for any boy that comes around..." She shakes her head in disgust. "I want a referral every month and it better tell me you''re still a virgin or else, understand?" <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says as she storms out of the room without giving you a chance to respond.'
+						'Before you can finish, she cuts you off. "I''m not going to have you running around town like so many of those other girls I see! Opening their legs for any boy that comes around..." She shakes her head in disgust. "I want a referral every month and it better tell me you''re still a virgin or else, understand?" your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> says before she storms out of the room without giving you a chance to respond.'
 						act 'I understand...':gt 'budilnik', 'start'
 					end
 				end

+ 73 - 72
locations/korr.qsrc

@@ -50,10 +50,10 @@ act '<b>Go to the street</b>':
 	end
 end
 
-act 'The bedroom':gt 'bedr'
-act 'The bathroom':gt 'vanr'
-act 'The kitchen':gt 'kuhr'
-act 'The living room':gt 'sitr'
+act 'Go to the bedroom':gt 'bedr'
+act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'vanr'
+act 'Go to the kitchen':gt 'kuhr'
+act 'Go to the living room':gt 'sitr'
 
 popolaini = 0
 saunaYouRoom = 0
@@ -76,22 +76,23 @@ else
 	'A modern hall with stylish furniture, including a wall-mounted <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a>.'
 end
 
-if umbrella > 0:'On a hook hangs an umbrella.'
+if umbrella > 0:'Your umbrella hangs on a hook.'
 
-if krolik = 1:'Resting on the floor there''s your rabbit <a href="exec:gt ''krol'', ''start''"><<$namekrol>></a>.'
-if ParrotQW['Owned1'] = 1:'Your parrot sits in a cage. <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$ParrotQW[''Name1'']>></a>.'
+if krolik = 1:'Your rabbit <a href="exec:gt ''krol'', ''start''"><<$namekrol>></a> sits in it''s cage on the floor.'
+if ParrotQW['Owned1'] = 1:'Your parrot <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$ParrotQW[''Name1'']>></a> sits in it''s cage.'
 
 if parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 1:
 	parkblackmail = 2
 	parkday = daystart
-	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it, you find several pictures inside. Shit! Are these pictures of you giving blowjobs to two guys in the park?'
+	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it, you''re horrified to find several pictures of you giving blowjobs to the guys in the park inside.'
 	'A small note accompanying them says:'
-	'If you do not want these pictures to be posted on your porch and sent to your work place, then come to this address (address listed is a Studio)'
-	'PS, if you do not come today, these pictures will be hanging in your entrance hall tomorrow.'
+	'If you don''t want these pictures to be posted on your door and sent to your work place, then come to this address.'
+	'PS, if you don''t come today, these pictures will be hanging in your stairwell tomorrow.'
+	'You check the address and find that it''s a studio of some kind.'
 elseif parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 2:
 	parkblackmail = 0
 	fotoyousuck = 1
-	'Oh shit! Photos of you with your face covered in cum with two dicks in your mouth are covering your entrance hall walls.'
+	'You''re horrifed and embarrassed when you see photos of you with your face covered in cum with two dicks in your mouth covering your stairwell walls.'
 end
 
 !!if rand (0,2) ! 0:gs 'din_bad' & dynamic $mobile_check
@@ -102,14 +103,14 @@ if hour >= 9 and hour <= 20 and santehnikDolg > 0 and money >= santehnikDolg:
 	act 'Go to the door':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You go to the door and look through the peephole. You see a dark male figure. Apparently the man heard you. "It''s me. Grisha, the plumber. You owe me some money, remember?" he syas through the door.'
+		'You go to the door and look through the peephole to see a dark male figure. "It''s me. Grisha, the plumber. You owe me some money, remember?" he says through the door.'
 
 		act 'Answer the door':
 			*clr & cla
 			money -= santehnikDolg
 			santehnikDolg = 0
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You open the door and Gregory smiles. "I thought you were hiding from me. So? Do you have my money?" You nod and pay him the 1,500 rubles.'
+			'You open the door and Grisha smiles. "I thought you were hiding from me. So, do you have my money?" You nod and pay him the money you owe.'
 
 			act 'Close the door':gt $curloc
 		end
@@ -125,9 +126,9 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 		karta = 0
 		stolmoney = 0
 		minut += 120
-		'A police patrol arrives and takes you to court. You manage to pay off your debts and you are released after reconciling the parties.'
+		'The police arrive and take you to court. You manage to pay off your debts and are released.'
 
-		act 'Get out of the courthouse':gt 'city_center'
+		act 'Leave the courthouse':gt 'city_center'
 	else
 		DolgRS = 650000 - moneySUM - 60000
 		money = 0
@@ -137,9 +138,9 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 		year += 5
 		age = year - ((pcs_dob - (pcs_dob mod 10000)) / 10000)
 		money = 2000
-		'A police patrol arrives and takes you to court. After standing trial, you are given five years of jail time and are required to pay your debt of <<DolgRS>>.'
+		'The police arrive and take you to court. After standing trial, you are given five years of jail time and are required to pay your debt of <<DolgRS>>.'
 
-		act 'Sit on the area':
+		act 'Serve your time':
 			*clr & cla
 			srok_kolvo = 1
 			srok_otsidki += 5
@@ -171,7 +172,8 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 			gs 'uniutil', 'student', 'unenroll'
 			gs 'stat'
 
-			'Time drags on slowly. Your life and work are tedious and monotonous. You''ve been sewing for five years, having meals in the dining room and going to sleep in the barracks surrounded by other female inmates. 1,000 <b>₽</b> of your 2,000 <b>₽</b> per month salary goes towards your debt repayment. As slow as it seems, time does not stand still and your torment finally comes to an end. You are released and given 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You board the train and come back to the city.'
+			'Time drags on slowly. Your life and work are tedious and monotonous. You''ve been sewing for five years, having meals in the dining room and going to sleep surrounded by other female inmates. 1,000 <b>₽</b> of your 2,000 <b>₽</b> per month salary goes towards your debt repayment.' 
+			'As slow as it seems, time doesn''t stand still and your torment finally comes to an end. You are released and given 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You board the train and return to the city.'
 
 			act 'Get off the train': gt 'city_industrial_train', 'outside'
 		end
@@ -185,38 +187,38 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQWDay'] ! daystart and BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 1 and hour >= 8 and
 	act 'Walk up to the door':
 		*clr & cla
 		gs 'stat'
-		'You walk up to the door and look through the peephole. You see a few men, and even in the dark, you recognize them from their caps. <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>! This is the police, open up!'
+		'You walk up to the door and look through the peephole. You see a few men, and even in the dark, you recognize them from their caps. "<<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>! This is the police, open up!"'
 
 		act 'Answer the door':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 60
 			BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 2
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You open the door, wondering what they want from you. There are several men in uniform and others in civilian clothes. A lean and skinny guy with with a weeks worth of stubble and a pistol in a holster slung under his armpit says "Please take a seat while we search the apartment." The decective then turns to you. "That''s a warrant for your arrest and this is a search warrant. You can read them." The police fully search your apartment. Soon, one of them comes out and says: "Here are the keys. According to the description, these look like the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen." The detective frowns at you and nods to the policeman, who puts your hands behind your back and snaps the handcuffs around your wrists.'
+			'You open the door, wondering what they want from you. There are several men in uniform and others in civilian clothes. A lean and skinny man with with a weeks worth of stubble and a pistol in a holster slung under his armpit speaks to you. "Please take a seat while we search the apartment. This is a warrant for your arrest and this is a search warrant for your apartment. You can read them." The men start searching your apartment and a few minutes later, one of them reappears. "Here are the keys. According to the description, these look like the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen." The detective frowns at you and nods to the officer, who pulls your hands behind your back and snaps the handcuffs around your wrists.'
 
 			act 'Go with the police':
 				*clr & cla
 				minut += 60
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You''re taken out of the house in handcuffs and pushed into a police UAZ. After the door slams shut, the car leaves, shaking and growling at each bump. You finally arrive somewhere and you are taken from the car and into a building. You are brought into an interview room where the dectective is waiting for you. He takes the handcuffs off you and offers you a seat. You sit in a hard and uncomfortable chair while the detective turns the TV on and inserts a video tape. On the screen is a picture of a security camera in Bystroeshke. You soon appear in the corridor, go to the office door and enter. After a while, the door opens again and you come out of the office holding a thick envelope. The detective takes the tape out and inserts another one.' 
-				'It shows Chubais'' office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and take an envelope with <<$BurgerQW[''IlySecurityCamDesc'']>> written on it. The detective turns the TV off, picks up a plastic bag with the keys inside and finally speaks. "Tests prove that the keys found in your apartment are those to the office and the safe of Bystroezhki. The tapes from the surveillance cameras clearly show you entering the office and taking 650,000 rubles." He takes out a pen and paper and begins to write. While writing, he looks up to you with gloomy eyes and says. "A confession will help you in the court. Since this is a first time offense and provided you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence if you admit your guilt."'
+				'You''re escorted out of the building in handcuffs and pushed into a police car. After the door slams shut, the car starts up and drives through the city streets until it stops outside the police station and you''re pulled out and brought into an interview room where the dectective is waiting for you. He takes the handcuffs off you and offers you a seat. You sit in a hard and uncomfortable chair while the detective turns the TV on and inserts a video tape. On the screen is footage from a security camera in Bystroeshke showing you appear in the corridor and entering the office before exiting a few minutes later holding a thick envelope. The detective takes the tape out and inserts another one.' 
+				'It shows Chubais'' office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and take the envelope with <<$BurgerQW[''IlySecurityCamDesc'']>> written on it. The detective turns the TV off, picks up a plastic bag with the keys inside and finally speaks. "Tests prove that the keys found in your apartment are those to the office and the safe of Bystroezhki. The tapes from the surveillance cameras clearly show you entering the office and taking 650,000 rubles." He takes out a pen and paper and begins to write. While writing, he looks up to you with gloomy eyes and says "A confession will help you in the court. Since this is a first time offense and provided you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence if you admit your guilt."'
 
 				act 'Sign confession':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 60
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You sign the confession and the detective barks: "Duty officer." A policeman enters the room and the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
+					'You sign the confession and the detective signals for an officer, who enters the room as the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
 
-					act 'Go':gt 'kameraKPZ'
+					act 'Go with him':gt 'kameraKPZ'
 				end
 
-				act 'Tell how it was':
+				act 'Tell the truth':
 					*clr & cla
 					minut += 60
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You tell the detective what actually happened and how Ilyushkin framed you, but he hardly listens to you before he slams his fist on the table and yells at you, "I was not born yesterday! If you will not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" A policeman enters the room and the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
+					'You tell the detective what actually happened and how Ilyushkin framed you, but he barely listens to you before he slams his fist on the table and yells at you. "I wasn''t born yesterday! If you will not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" An officer then enters the room and the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
 
-					act 'Go':gt 'kameraKPZ'
+					act 'Go with him':gt 'kameraKPZ'
 				end
 			end
 		end
@@ -239,7 +241,7 @@ if sick > 0 and doktorday ! daystart:
 	!!	if sick < 1:sick = 1
 	!!	if sickstage = 1:sicktimer += 5
 
-	!!	'A doctor arrives from the clinic and examins you. After examination, the doctor gives a shot and you feel better.'
+	!!	'A doctor arrives from the clinic and examines you. After the examination, the doctor gives a shot and you start feeling better.'
 
 	!!	act 'Move away':gt 'korr'
 	!!end
@@ -251,9 +253,9 @@ $ninel0 = {
 	cla
 	*clr
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/ninel00.jpg"></center>'
-	'You open the door. Standing on the threshold is a pretty young girl with a medical bag in her hand. You greet her.'
-	'"Hello, my name is Ninel. - I do the home visits for the clinic. Where is the patient?"'
-	'"That would be me... kha-kha-kha."'
+	'You open the door. Standing on the threshold is a pretty young girl with a medical bag in her hand.'
+	'"Hello, my name is Ninel. I do the home visits for the clinic. Where is the patient?"'
+	'"That would be me..."'
 	'"I see. First, we need to get you back into bed."'
 
 	act 'Follow the doctor in the bedroom and lay down':
@@ -263,7 +265,7 @@ $ninel0 = {
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom0.jpg"></center>'
 		'The doctor sits on the edge of your bed and checks your forehead.'
 		'"What are your symptoms <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can I call you that?"'
-		'"Of course..." You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry. I have high fever, sore throat and a cough that''s killing me!"'
+		'"Of course..." You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry. I have a high fever, a sore throat and a cough that''s killing me!"'
 		'"Running nose? Headaches? Aching bones?"'
 		'"Yes, all of them."'
 		'"Well, take your clothes off so I can examine you."'
@@ -302,7 +304,7 @@ $ninel0 = {
 						clr
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom2.jpg"></center>'
-						'You obediently roll over, offering your ass. The doctor lubricates your anus with some vaselin and deftly introduces the thermometer. You flinch, not from pain but pleasure. The doctor doesn''t just stick the thermometer in your ass, but slowly moves it back and forth. It''s very nice and you feel your excitement growing.'
+						'You obediently roll over and offer your ass. The doctor lubricates your anus with some vaseline and deftly introduces the thermometer. You flinch, not from pain but pleasure. The doctor doesn''t just stick the thermometer in your ass, but slowly moves it back and forth. It''s very nice and you feel your excitement growing.'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 10
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -321,13 +323,13 @@ $ninel0 = {
 									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom5.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor begins to stroke and knead your stomach and thighs. You are not actually sure if this is a medical procedure. She does it for too long, but it''s too pleasant and you don''t object.'
-									'Your excitement continues to grow and you feel your pussy moistening as you start to whine sweetly...'
+									'The doctor begins to stroke and knead your stomach and thighs. You''re not actually sure if this is a real medical procedure. She does it for far too long, but it''s too pleasant and you don''t object.'
+									'Your excitement continues to grow and you feel your pussy moistening as you start to moan softly.'
 
 									gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15
 									gs 'stat'
 
-									act 'Blush of embarrassment':
+									act 'Blush in embarrassment':
 										cla
 										*clr
 										clr
@@ -335,10 +337,10 @@ $ninel0 = {
 										gs 'stat'
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom6.jpg"></center>'
 										'You blush with embarrassment, but then fall below the hands of the doctor and she begins to caress your pussy'
-										'"Doctor, what are you doing!" you scream feeling embarrassed, outraged and frightened.'
+										'"Doctor, what are you doing!" you scream, feeling embarrassed, outraged and frightened.'
 										'"I feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use his power quietly." she replies.'
-										'"So you''re a magician too?"'
-										'"Yes, but only with a special kind magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?'
+										'"So you''re a succubus too?!"'
+										'"Yes, but only with a special kind of magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?'
 										'"No, I don''t think so..."'
 										'"It''s based on sensuality and sex. Roughly speaking, I can only cast spells when having sex."'
 										'"So...?"'
@@ -361,13 +363,12 @@ $ninel0 = {
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom3.jpg"></center>'
 							'"Doctor, what the hell are you doing?" you squeal.'
-							'She takes the thermometer out of your ass and calmly replies:'
-							'"I''m measuring your temperature. 39.2, very bad."'
+							'She takes the thermometer out of your ass and calmly replies. "I''m measuring your temperature. 39.2, very bad."'
 
-							act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
+							act 'What''s wrong with me?':
 								cla
 								'"Doctor, what''s wrong with me?" you ask, somewhat scared.'
-								'"You have a really bad flu, but I''ll make you an injection of antibiotic and antigen. You will soon feel better."'
+								'"You have a really bad flu, but I''ll make you an injection of antibiotics and antigens. You will soon feel better."'
 
 								act 'Get injection':
 									cla
@@ -379,8 +380,8 @@ $ninel0 = {
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom4.jpg"></center>'
 									'The doctor jabs the needle into one of your ass cheeks and injects the contents. You whimper slightly.'
-									'"That''s about everything. You have to rest in bed, drink hot drinks, take antibiotics and nose drops, stay on a balanced diet. When your temperature drops, come to the clinic to see me."'
-									'"Thank you, Doctor, I will follow your instructions."'
+									'"That''s about everything. You have to rest in bed, drink hot drinks, take antibiotics and nose drops and stay on a balanced diet. When your temperature drops, come to the clinic to see me."'
+									'"Thank you, Doctor, I''ll follow your instructions."'
 									'The doctor says goodbye and leaves.'
 
 									act 'Back to bed':gt 'bedr'
@@ -388,7 +389,7 @@ $ninel0 = {
 							end
 						end
 
-						act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
+						act 'What''s wrong with me?':
 							cla
 							'"Doctor, what''s wrong with me?" you ask fearfully.'
 							'"I''m afraid you have angina, <<$pcs_nickname>>. I would advise you recieve immediate treatment." she replies.'
@@ -399,7 +400,7 @@ $ninel0 = {
 								cla
 								*clr
 								'"Doctor, I can''t go to the hospital!"'
-								'She smiles at you. "Well... I guess we could do it a different way then. I''ll give you a couple of shots to start with.'
+								'She smiles at you. "Well... I guess we could do it a different way then. I''ll give you a few shots to start with.'
 								'"Oh thank you, doctor!"'
 
 								act 'Lie on your stomach and bare your ass':
@@ -407,11 +408,11 @@ $ninel0 = {
 									clr
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/nadom9.jpg"></center>'
-									'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass cheek and then pats your ass a few times. You suddenly develop an incredible sexual arousal and it is as if a fire has started between your thighs. Your pussy burns and drips, your breath gets heavy, your nipples harden and get stiff...'
-									'"Doctor, what''s happening?" you ask, almost screaming. You feel embarrassed and kind of frightened, but your voice breaks, betraying your arousal, and you moan voluptuously'
-									'"Yeah! I knew it! I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my power quietly."'
-									'"So you''re a magician too?!"'
-									'"Yes, but only with a special kind magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
+									'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass cheek and then pats your ass a few times. You suddenly develop an incredible sexual arousal, as if a fire has started between your thighs. Your pussy burns and drips, your breath gets heavy and your nipples harden.'
+									'"Doctor, what''s happening?" you ask, almost screaming. You feel embarrassed and frightened, but your voice breaks, betraying your arousal, and you moan voluptuously.'
+									'"I knew it! I can feel the magic in you, which means you''re one of us, and I can use my power quietly."'
+									'"So you''re a succubus too?!"'
+									'"Yes, but only with a special kind of magic. Tantric. Have you heard of it?"'
 									'"No, I don''t think so..."'
 									'"It''s based on sensuality and sex, roughly speaking, I can cast spells only while having sex."'
 									'"So...?"'
@@ -439,16 +440,16 @@ $drPP = {
 	*clr
 	'You answer the door. On the threshold is an older, balding man with a medical bag in his hand.'
 	'"Hello, doctor."'
-	'"Hello, dear. I am Peter, the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this cold air.'
+	'"Hello, dear. I''m the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this cold air.'
 
-	act 'Take the doctor to the bedroom.':
+	act 'Go back to bed':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You walk back to the bedroom with the doctor. He sits on the edge of the bed and feels your forehead'
+		'You walk back to the bedroom with the doctor. He sits on the edge of the bed and feels your forehead.'
 		'"So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>. What are your symptoms?'
-		'"Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have sore throat - very sore actually - and a high temperature."'
-		'"And a nasty cough I see. And judging by your voice, also a running nose."'
+		'"Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have a sore throat - very sore actually - and a high temperature."'
+		'"And a nasty cough too I see. And judging by your voice, also a running nose."'
 		'"Yes... Aachoo!!"'
 		'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, please remove your clothes so I can examine you."'
 
@@ -459,7 +460,7 @@ $drPP = {
 			clr
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You undres and the doctor listens to your lungs for a while.'
+			'You undress and the doctor listens to your lungs for a while.'
 			'"Now let''s take a look at your throat. Open your mouth wide and say Aahh."'
 
 			act 'Aahh':
@@ -473,11 +474,11 @@ $drPP = {
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp4.jpg"></center>'
-					'The doctor waits a few minutes, then looks at the thermometer and shakes his head'
+					'The doctor waits a few minutes, then looks at the thermometer and shakes his head.'
 
-					act 'Doctor, what''s wrong with me?':
+					act 'What''s wrong with me?':
 						cla
-						'"You have the flu." he says "Nothing too serious, I''ll just give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now please roll over so I can give you the injection."'
+						'"You have the flu." he calmly replies. "Nothing too serious, I''ll just give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink plenty of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now please roll over so I can give you the injection."'
 
 						act 'Roll over and lay on your stomach':
 							cla
@@ -492,7 +493,7 @@ $drPP = {
 							'"Thank you, Doctor, I will."'
 							'You escort the doctor back to the entrace where he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door, you head back to bed.'
 
-							act 'Back to bed':gt 'bedr'
+							act 'Go back to bed':gt 'bedr'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -509,16 +510,16 @@ $polidin = {
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall.jpg"></center>'
 	'You dial the number of the clinic several times, but it''s always busy.'
 
-	act 'Call again and again':
+	act 'Keep trying':
 		cla
 		'Finally, a tired nurse''s voice answers. "Hello, this is the clinic. How can I help you?"'
 
-		act 'Hello ...':
+		act 'Ask for doctor':
 			cla
 			'"Hello. Can I get a house call?" you manage to say between coughing fits.'
-			'The nurse asks. "Your name and address?"'
+			'"Your name and address, please?" she asks.'
 
-			act 'Give address':
+			act 'Give your address':
 				cla
 				'You have a coughing fit before you''re able to answer. "Sorry, it''s <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4, apartment 69." you manage before sneezing.'
 				'"One moment please." she responds before she puts you on hold.'
@@ -531,24 +532,24 @@ $polidin = {
 					'You wait for five minutes, occasionally coughing and sneezing, until she finally returns. "So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, what are your symptoms?"'
 					'You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry, I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
 					'"Is your temperature high?"'
-					'"Yes, quite so, 39.2°C" you tell her followed by a sneeze.'
+					'"Yes, quite so, 39.2°C." you tell her, followed by a sneeze.'
 					'"Very well. A doctor will come see you at home."'
 					'"How soon?"'
-					'"As soon as one is free." she answers. "Yours isn''t an isolated case"'
-					'"Thank you." you respond.'
+					'"As soon as one is free." she answers. "Yours isn''t an isolated case."'
+					'"Thank you." you respond and hang up.'
 
 					if ninelsex = 1:
 						act 'Is Ninel available?':
 							cla
 							'"Is Doctor Pavlovna available? She is my regular doctor."'
-							'"Let me check." The nurse puts you on hold for a couple of minutes and then comes back on. "Yes she is free and will make the house call."'
-							'"Once again, thank you very much." you reply.'
+							'"Let me check." The nurse puts you on hold for a few minutes before returning. "Yes, she is free and will make the house call."'
+							'"Once again, thank you very much." you reply and hang up.'
 
 							act 'Continue':gt 'housecall', 'ninel3'
 						end
 					end
 
-					act 'Back to bed':
+					act 'Go back to bed':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						picrand = rand(21, 27)

+ 69 - 65
locations/korr2x.qsrc

@@ -32,19 +32,21 @@ end
 '<center><b><font color = maroon>Corridor</font></b></center>'
 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pushkin/apartment/korr2x.jpg"></center>'
 
-if umbrella > 0:'On a hook hangs an umbrella'
-if krolik = 1:'On the floor, resting is <a href="exec:gt ''krol'',''start''"><<$namekrol>></a>'
-if ParrotQW['Owned1'] = 1:'In the cage sits your parrot <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$ParrotQW[''Name1'']>></a>.'
+if umbrella > 0:'Your umbrella is on a hook.'
+if krolik = 1:'Your rabbit <a href="exec:gt ''krol'', ''start''"><<$namekrol>></a> sits in it''s cage on the floor.'
+if ParrotQW['Owned1'] = 1:'Your parrot <a href="exec:gt ''popu'', ''start''"><<$ParrotQW[''Name1'']>></a> sits in it''s cage.'
 if parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 1:
 	parkblackmail = 2
 	parkday = daystart
-	'You got a manila envelope in the mail, opening it you see the photos inside. Hell, the pictures are of you giving a blowjob to two guys in a park.'
-	'A small note states: If you don''t want to have these pictures all over the stairwell and sent to your work place, come to (The address contains the Photo Studio).'
-	'PS, if you don''t come in today, tomorrow the pictures will be hanging all over the stairwell.'
+	'A heavy envelope has arrived in the mail. When you open it, you''re horrified to find several pictures of you giving blowjobs to the guys in the park inside.'
+	'A small note accompanying them says:'
+	'"If you don''t want these pictures to be posted on your door and sent to your work place, then come to this address."'
+	'"PS, if you don''t come today, these pictures will be hanging in your stairwell tomorrow."'
+	'You check the address and find that it''s a studio of some kind.'
 elseif parkday ! daystart and parkblackmail = 2:
 	parkblackmail = 0
 	fotoyousuck = 1
-	'Hell, there is even pictures of you, with your face covered in sperm.'
+	'You''re horrifed and embarrassed when you see photos of you with your face covered in cum with two dicks in your mouth covering your stairwell walls.'
 end
 
 act 'Go to the bedroom':
@@ -56,7 +58,7 @@ end
 act 'Go to the kitchen':
 	gt'kuhr2x'
 end
-act 'Go to the Hall':
+act 'Go to the hall':
 	gt'sitr2x'
 end
 act '<b><font color="maroon">Go outside</font></b>':
@@ -78,13 +80,13 @@ if hour >= 9 and hour <= 20 and santehnikDolg > 0 and money >= santehnikDolg:
 	act 'Answer the door':
 		cls
 		gs'stat'
-		'You went to the door and looked through the peephole, you see a dark figure of a man. Apparently the man heard you and says. "It''s me. Plumber Grisha. Do you have my money?"'
+		'You go to the door and look through the peephole to see a dark male figure. "It''s me. Grisha, the plumber. You owe me some money, remember?" he says through the door.'
 		act 'Open the door':
 			cls
 			money -= santehnikDolg
 			santehnikDolg = 0
 			gs'stat'
-			'You opened the door and plumber Grisha smiled at you. "I thought you were hiding from me. Well? Do you have the money to pay me?" You nodded and got your purse. Counting out fifteen hundred you gave him the money. He put it in his pocket, said goodbye and left.'
+			'You open the door and Grisha smiles. "I thought you were hiding from me. So, do you have my money?" You nod and pay him the money you owe.'
 			act 'Close the door':gt $curloc
 		end
 	end
@@ -98,7 +100,7 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 		karta = 0
 		stolmoney = 0
 		minut += 120
-		'The police came and took you to the courthouse. Luckily you are able to pay your debt and are released.'
+		'The police arrive and take you to court. You manage to pay off your debts and are released.'
 		act 'Leave the courthouse':gt'city_center'
 	elseif DolgRS > moneySUM:
 		DolgRS = 650000-moneySUM-60000
@@ -109,8 +111,8 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 		year += 5
 		age = year - ((pcs_dob - (pcs_dob mod 10000)) / 10000)
 		money = 2000
-		'The police came and took you to the courthouse. After you stand trial, you are given five years of general regime, it is obliged to pay the debt <<DolgRS>><b>₽</b>.'
-		act 'Sitting in jail':
+		'The police arrive and take you to court. After standing trial, you are given five years of jail time and are required to pay your debt of <<DolgRS>>.'
+		act 'Serve your time':
 			cls
 			srok_kolvo = 1
 			srok_otsidki += 5
@@ -141,8 +143,9 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 3 and hour >= 9 and hour <= 20:
 			young_shop_work = 0
 			gs 'uniutil', 'student', 'unenroll'
 			gs'stat'
-			'Time dragged on for a long time. Your life and work in prison was tedious and monotonous. You sewed quilted jackets, had dinner in the cafeteria and went to sleep in the barracks surrounded by other women inmates. With your salary 2000 <b>₽</b> a month listed 1000 debt repayment. Eventually you payed off your debt and your torment came to an end. With your time served you were released with 2000 <b>₽</b>. You were taken to the train station and given a ticket back to the city.'
-			act 'Exit the train': gt 'city_industrial_train', 'outside'
+			'Time drags on slowly. Your life and work are tedious and monotonous. You''ve been sewing for five years, having meals in the dining room and going to sleep surrounded by other female inmates. 1,000 <b>₽</b> of your 2,000 <b>₽</b> per month salary goes towards your debt repayment.' 
+			'As slow as it seems, time doesn''t stand still and your torment finally comes to an end. You are released and given 2,000 <b>₽</b>. You board the train and return to the city.'
+			act 'Get off the train': gt 'city_industrial_train', 'outside'
 		end
 	end
 	exit
@@ -152,33 +155,32 @@ if BurgerQW['IlyQWDay'] ! daystart and BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 1 and hour >= 8 and
 	act 'Answer the door':
 		cls
 		gs'stat'
-		'You went to the door and looked through the peephole, you see several men. One of the men said to you through the door. "<<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>> open up, police."'
+		'You walk up to the door and look through the peephole. You see a few men, and even in the dark, you recognize them from their caps. "<<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>! This is the police, open up!"'
 		act 'Open the door':
 			cls
 			minut += 60
 			BurgerQW['IlyQW']  = 2
 			gs'stat'
-			'You opened the door for the police, puzzled about what they''d want from you. A thin and skinny guy with a weeks worth of stubble and a gun in a holster said. "Witness please take a seat, while we search the apartment." The investigator turned to you. "This is a court order, for your arrest and this is a search warrant for your apartment." The police searched your apartment. Soon, one of them came out and said. "I found the keys." It looked like it was the keys to the office and the safe, where the money was stolen from. Witnesses signed the protocol the investigator gave them. The police put your hands behind your back and cuffed you.'
-			act 'Arrested':
+			'You open the door, wondering what they want from you. There are several men in uniform and others in civilian clothes. A lean and skinny man with with a weeks worth of stubble and a pistol in a holster slung under his armpit speaks to you. "Please take a seat while we search the apartment. This is a warrant for your arrest and this is a search warrant for your apartment. You can read them." The men start searching your apartment and a few minutes later, one of them reappears. "Here are the keys. According to the description, these look like the keys to the office and the safe where the money was stolen." The detective frowns at you and nods to the officer, who pulls your hands behind your back and snaps the handcuffs around your wrists.'
+			act 'Go with the police':
 				cls
 				minut += 60
 				gs'stat'
-				'You were brought out of your place in handcuffs and put into a police UAZ, where they drive you to the station. Once at the station you are taken to a room, inside it waits the already familiar to you investigator. He takes the cuffs off you and asks you to sit down. You sit on the hard uncomfortable chair, meanwhile the investigator turned on a TV and set up a video. On the screen there was a picture of a surveillance camera in Bystroeshke. It showed the corridor, soon you appeared in the hallway, went to the office door and opened it. You went inside for a bit and then came out of the office with a thick envelope in your hands. The investigator turned off the video and started another one. It shows Chubais office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and remove an envelope with <<$BurgerQW[''IlySecurityCamDesc'']>> written on it.'
-
-				'The inspector turned off the TV and took a plastic bag from the table with the keys. He threw them on the table and finally spoke. "The examination determined that these are the keys to the room and the safe. They were found during a search of your apartment. On the surveillance cameras we can clearly see how you got into the office and stole 650,000." He took out a pen and paper and began writing. As he wrote he looked up to you with gloomy eyes and said. "A confession will help you in court, since this is a first time offence and provided you return the money, you may be given a conditional sentence, if you admit your guilt."'
+				You''re escorted out of the building in handcuffs and pushed into a police car. After the door slams shut, the car starts up and drives through the city streets until it stops outside the police station and you''re pulled out and brought into an interview room where the dectective is waiting for you. He takes the handcuffs off you and offers you a seat. You sit in a hard and uncomfortable chair while the detective turns the TV on and inserts a video tape. On the screen is footage from a security camera in Bystroeshke showing you appear in the corridor and entering the office before exiting a few minutes later holding a thick envelope. The detective takes the tape out and inserts another one.' 
+				'It shows Chubais'' office. The door opens and you walk in holding some keys. You go to the safe, open it with one of the keys and take the envelope with <<$BurgerQW[''IlySecurityCamDesc'']>> written on it. The detective turns the TV off, picks up a plastic bag with the keys inside and finally speaks. "Tests prove that the keys found in your apartment are those to the office and the safe of Bystroezhki. The tapes from the surveillance cameras clearly show you entering the office and taking 650,000 rubles." He takes out a pen and paper and begins to write. While writing, he looks up to you with gloomy eyes and says "A confession will help you in the court. Since this is a first time offense and provided you return the money, you may be given a suspended sentence if you admit your guilt."'
 				act 'Sign the confession':
 					cls
 					minut += 60
 					gs'stat'
-					'You signed the confession and the investigator shouted "Duty officer!" A police officer entered the room. The investigator nodded at you, "Take her."'
-					act 'Go':gt'kameraKPZ'
+					'You sign the confession and the detective signals for an officer, who enters the room as the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
+					act 'Go with him':gt'kameraKPZ'
 				end
-				act 'Tell how it was':
+				act 'Tell the truth':
 					cls
 					minut += 60
 					gs'stat'
-					'You tell the investigator how it happened. How Ilyushkin framed you. The investigator listened to you for a bit but then he slammed his fist on the table and yelled at you "I was not born yesterday, none of that nonsense makes any sense! If you do not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" A police officer entered the room. The investigator nodded at you. "Take her."'
-					act 'Go':gt'kameraKPZ'
+					'You tell the detective what actually happened and how Ilyushkin framed you, but he barely listens to you before he slams his fist on the table and yells at you. "I wasn''t born yesterday! If you will not cooperate, you''ll rot in prison!" An officer then enters the room and the detective nods in your direction. "Take her."'
+					act 'Go with him':gt'kameraKPZ'
 				end
 			end
 		end
@@ -191,17 +193,19 @@ if sick > 0 and doktorday ! daystart: act 'Call a doctor':doktorday = daystart &
 $drPP = {
 	cla
 	*clr
-	'You answer the door. On the threshold there is an older balding man with a medical bag in his hand.'
+	'You answer the door. On the threshold is an older, balding man with a medical bag in his hand.'
 	'"Hello, doctor."'
-	'"Hello, dear. I am Peter, the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this draft.'
-	act 'Carry a doctor in the bedroom':
+	'"Hello, dear. I''m the local doctor. Now please go back to bed and don''t stand in this cold air.'
+	act 'Go back to bed':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You return to the bedroom, along with the doctor. He sat on the edge of the bed and felt your forehead.'
-		'"So <<$pcs_nickname>>. What are your symptoms?'
-		'You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry, I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
-		'"Well lets get you undressed so I can examine you."'
+		'You walk back to the bedroom with the doctor. He sits on the edge of the bed and feels your forehead.'
+		'"So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>. What are your symptoms?'
+		'"Ahem, ahem... Well, Doctor, I have a sore throat - very sore actually - and a high temperature."'
+		'"And a nasty cough too I see. And judging by your voice, also a running nose."'
+		'"Yes... Aachoo!!"'
+		'"Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, please remove your clothes so I can examine you."'
 		act 'Undress':
 			cla
 			*clr
@@ -209,22 +213,22 @@ $drPP = {
 			clr
 			gs'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp2.jpg"></center>'
-			'You undressed and the doctor listens to your lungs.'
-			'"Now lets take a look at your mouth, open wide and say Ah."'
-			act 'A-a-a':
+			'You undress and the doctor listens to your lungs for a while.'
+			'"Now let''s take a look at your throat. Open your mouth wide and say Aahh."'
+			act 'Ahh':
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp3.jpg"></center>'
 				'You open your mouth and the doctor looks in.'
-				'"Hmm, we need to take your temperature."'
+				'"Mmmm, I see. Well, let''s take your temperature."'
 				act 'Put the thermometer under your armpit':
 					cla
 					*clr
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp4.jpg"></center>'
-					'The doctor looked at the thermometer and shook his head'
-					act 'Doctor, whats wrong with me?':
+					'The doctor waits a few minutes, then looks at the thermometer and shakes his head.'
+					act 'What''s wrong with me?':
 						cla
-						'"You have the flu. Nothing wrong, I''ll give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now roll over so I can give you the injection."'
+						'You have the flu." he calmly replies. "Nothing too serious, I''ll just give you an injection and you''ll feel better soon. Stay in bed, drink plenty of fluids and try to rest as much as possible. When you feel better come to the clinic. Now please roll over so I can give you the injection."'
 						act 'Roll over':
 							cla
 							*clr
@@ -233,11 +237,11 @@ $drPP = {
 							lekarstvo += 3
 							gs'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/drpp5.jpg"></center>'
-							'The doctor gave you a shot in the ass.'
-							'"Remember stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest. When you feel better come by the clinic."'
-							'"Thanks you, doctor."'
-							'You escort the doctor out, he says goodbye as he leaves. After shutting the door you head back to bed.'
-							act 'Back to bed':gt'bedr2x'
+							'The doctor jabs a needle into your ass and injects the contents.'
+							'"Now remember. Stay in bed, drink lots of fluids and try to rest. When you feel better come by the clinic."'
+							'"Thank you, Doctor, I will."'
+							'You escort the doctor back to the entrace where he says goodbye and leaves. After shutting the door, you head back to bed.'
+							act 'Go back to bed':gt'bedr2x'
 						end
 					end
 				end
@@ -254,41 +258,41 @@ $polidin = {
 	if callrand = 0:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall.jpg"></center>'
 	if callrand = 1:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall.jpg"></center>'
 	if callrand = 2:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/apartment/event/sick/housecall.jpg"></center>'
-	'You dial the number of the clinic several times it''s always busy.'
-	act 'Call again and again':
+	'You dial the number of the clinic several times, but it''s always busy.'
+	act 'Keep trying':
 		cla
-		'Finally, a tired nurse''s voice answers. "Hello clinic."'
-		act 'Hello.':
+		'Finally, a tired nurse''s voice answers. "Hello, this is the clinic. How can I help you?"'
+		act 'Ask for doctor':
 			cla
-			'"Hello. Can I get a house call?" You manage to say between coughing fits.'
-			'The nurse asks. "Your name and address?"'
-			act 'Give address':
+			'"Hello. Can I get a house call?" you manage to say between coughing fits.'
+			'"Your name and address, please?" she asks.'
+			act 'Give your address':
 				cla
-				'After coughing "Sorry, <<$pcs_nickname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4 apartment 69." you manage before sneezing again.'
-				'The nurse responds. "One moment please." Then she puts you on hold.'
+				'You have a coughing fit before you''re able to answer. "Sorry, it''s <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>. Street Park House 4, apartment 69." you manage before sneezing.'
+				'"One moment please." she responds before she puts you on hold.'
 				act 'Wait':
 					cla
 					minut = minut + 5
 					clr
 					gs'stat'
-					'You wait for five minutes, occasionally coughing and sneezing, until she finally returns. "So <<$pcs_lastname>> <<$pcs_nickname>>. What are your symptoms?'
+					'You wait for five minutes, occasionally coughing and sneezing, until she finally returns. "So Miss <<$pcs_lastname>>, what are your symptoms?"'
 					'You start to answer but end up coughing. "Sorry, I have a fever, sore throat, a cough and a runny nose."'
 					'"Is your temperature high?"'
-					'"Yes, very 39.2C" You tell her followed by a sneeze.'
-					'"Very well a doctor will come see you at home."'
+					'"Yes, quite so, 39.2°C." you tell her, followed by a sneeze.'
+					'"Very well. A doctor will come see you at home."'
 					'"How soon?"'
-					'"As soon as one is free."'
-					'"Thank you."'
+					'"As soon as one is free." she answers. "Yours isn''t an isolated case."'
+					'"Thank you." you respond and hang up.'
 					if ninelsex = 1:
-						act 'Is Ninel Pavlovna available?':
+						act 'Is Ninel available?':
 							cla
-							'"Is Doctor Ninel Pavlovna available? She is my regular doctor."'
-							'"Let me check" The nurse puts you on hold for a couple of minutes and then comes back on. "Yes she is free and will make the house call."'
-							'"Once again, thank you very much."'
+							'"Is Doctor Pavlovna available? She is my regular doctor."'
+							'"Let me check." The nurse puts you on hold for a few minutes before returning. "Yes, she is free and will make the house call."'
+							'"Once again, thank you very much." you reply and hang up.'
 							act 'Continue':gt'housecall','ninel3'
 						end
 					end
-					act 'Back to bed':
+					act 'Go back to bed':
 						cla
 						*clr
 						picrand = RAND(0,6)
@@ -306,7 +310,7 @@ $polidin = {
 						if timerand = 3:minut = minut + 120
 						if timerand = 4:minut = minut + 150
 						if timerand = 5:minut = minut + 180
-						'You lie in bed, shivering wrapped in a blanket. Time drags by painfully slow, you can''t say, how much time passed, before the doorbell rings.'
+						'You lie in bed, shivering while wrapped in a blanket. Time drags by painfully slow. You can''t say how much time passes before the doorbell rings.'
 						act 'Open the door':
 							if ninelmet > 0 and sick <= 50:
 								gt'housecall','ninel1'

+ 9 - 9
locations/korrPar.qsrc

@@ -38,7 +38,7 @@ gs 'family_schedule'
 'A <a href="exec:gt ''mirror'', ''start''">mirror</a> hangs on the wall near the front door.'
 *nl
 
-if indorf = 1:'With your parents being away to visit your grandparents, the apartment seems quiet and empty.'
+if indorf = 1:'With your parents away visiting your grandparents, the apartment seems quiet and empty.'
 
 if courtletter_date <= daystart and courtletter_date ! 0: gt 'sentence', 'letter'
 
@@ -247,7 +247,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 		pcs_mood = 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		*pl $korrParMomHeader
-		'When you enter the hallway, you find your mother waiting there for you. "What''s all this I hear about a video of you sucking some guy''s dick? How could you be so careless <<$pcs_nickname>>? You do realize this makes our whole family look bad..."'
+		'When you enter the hallway, you find your mother waiting for you. "What''s all this I hear about a video of you sucking some guy''s dick? How could you be so careless <<$pcs_nickname>>? You do realize this makes our whole family look bad..."'
 
 		act 'Apologize':
 			cla
@@ -277,7 +277,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 			GspravkaT = 2
 			motherKnowSpravka = 1
 			gs 'stat'
-			'"Oh my darling, where have you been? We have been so worried."'
+			'"Oh my darling, where have you been? We''ve been so worried!"'
 			'You go into the kitchen with your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> and spend some time explaining what happened to you. Many of the details are difficult to talk about, and you cry and hug your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> as you tell your story.'
 			'Your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> tells you she will sort out everything with the school and makes you a bowl of chicken soup.'
 			if pcs_energy >= 30:
@@ -313,7 +313,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				SchoolBlock = 1
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades = 0
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. You have never seen her this furious. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? I just got off the phone with the school. They told me you didn''t show up yet again and expelled you. I''m extremely disappointed with you! I''ve warned you so many times! If you want to remain living in this house, you best start pulling your weight around here! Right now I want you out of the house, go out and find some work!" After that, she pushes you out the door and slams it shut in your face.'
+				'You find your mother waiting for you when you enter the hallway. You have never seen her this furious before. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? I just got off the phone with the school. They told me you didn''t show up yet again and expelled you. I''m extremely disappointed with you! I''ve warned you so many times! If you want to keep sleeping under this roof, then you better start pulling your weight around here! Right now, I want you to go out and find a job!" She pushes you out the door and slams it shut in your face.'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 				exit
@@ -322,13 +322,13 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				npc_rel['A29'] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades -= 40
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. She seems very angry with you. "The school called saying you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is your last chance <<$pcs_nickname>>. You will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, life is going to get a lot tougher for you, especially around here!" Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
+				'You find your mother waiting for you when you enter the hallway. She seems very angry with you. "The school called saying you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is your last chance <<$pcs_nickname>>. You will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, life is going to get a lot tougher for you, especially around here!" Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
 			elseif schoolPredupr = 0:
 				schoolPredupr = 1
 				npc_rel['A29'] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades -= 20
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? The school called saying you weren''t at school today. You know they''re very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism. They said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
+				'You find your mother waiting for you when you enter the hallway. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? The school called saying you weren''t at school today. You know they''re very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism. They said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
 			end
 		elseif npc_rel['A29'] < 40:
 			if schoolPredupr = 2:
@@ -338,7 +338,7 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				home_owned[2] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades = 0
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. You have never seen her this furious. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? I just got off the phone with the school, they told me you didn''t show up yet again and expelled you. I''ve had it with you! I''ve warned you so many times! Go ahead, live your irresponsible life the way you want. You''re no longer welcome here." She already packed up all your things from your room before you got home, and roughly shoves the bag into your hands. After that, she pushes you out the door and slams it shut in your face.'
+				'You find your mother waiting for you when you enter the hallway. You have never seen her this furious before. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? I just got off the phone with the school, they told me you didn''t show up yet again and expelled you. I''ve had it with you! I''ve warned you so many times! Go ahead, live your irresponsible life the way you want. You''re no longer welcome here." She has already packed up all your things and roughly shoves the bag into your hands before she pushes you out the door and slams it shut in your face.'
 
 				act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 				exit
@@ -347,13 +347,13 @@ if hour >= 16 and hour <= 20 and indorf = 0:
 				npc_rel['A29'] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades -= 40
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. She seems very angry with you. "The school called saying you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is your last chance <<$pcs_nickname>>. You will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, I will personally kick you out of the house. If you cannot be responsible and behave like a normal person, then get out! No one is forcing you to stay." Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
+				'You find your mother waiting for you when you enter the hallway. She seems very angry with you. "The school called saying you didn''t show up for class again. They wanted to expel you! I had to go over there and beg the principal to give you one last chance. I''ve never felt so humiliated! This is your last chance <<$pcs_nickname>>. You will not embarrass me any further. If you miss one more day of school, they will kick you out. And if you get kicked out of school, I will personally kick you out of the house. If you cannot be responsible and behave like a normal person, then get out! No one is forcing you to stay." Having said her piece, your mother turns around and leaves.'
 			elseif schoolPredupr = 0:
 				schoolPredupr = 1
 				npc_rel['A29'] = 0
 				schoolprogul = 0
 				pcs_grades -= 20
-				'As you enter the hallway, you find your mother there waiting for you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? The school called saying you weren''t at school today. You know they''re very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism. They said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
+				'You find your mother waiting for you when you enter the hallway. "<<$pcs_nickname>>? The school called saying you weren''t at school today. You know they''re very unforgiving when it comes to absenteeism. They said they would expel you if it happens again. What are you doing with your life? Get it together!" Your mother angrily leaves the room, leaving you to your thoughts.'
 			end
 		end
 

+ 53 - 54
locations/kuhr.qsrc

@@ -26,9 +26,9 @@ if remkuhr = 1:'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residentia
 
 if kransloman = 1:
 	cla
-	'You notice a leak, your sink is out of order and it is necessary to call a plumber'
-	if Grisha = 0:act 'Call':dynamic $santehnik
-	if Grisha > 0:act 'Call Grisha, the plumber':dynamic $santehnikgr
+	'You notice a leak in your sink. It''s broken and you''ll need to call a plumber.'
+	if Grisha = 0:act 'Call the plumber':dynamic $santehnik
+	if Grisha > 0:act 'Call Grisha':dynamic $santehnikgr
 
 	act 'Leave': killvar 'fullmorrout' & gt 'korr' 
 
@@ -54,28 +54,28 @@ end
 if dirttarelka > 0:'<b><<dirttarelka>></b> dirty dishes are lying in the sink. <a href="exec:dynamic $dirtarm">Wash the dishes</a>.'
 
 if fairy > 0:
-	'Next to the sink is dishwashing liquid, enough for <b><<fairy>></b> uses.'
+	'There is dishwashing liquid next to the sink, enough for <b><<fairy>></b> uses.'
 else
-	'<b><font color="red">You have nothing to wash dishes with, you need to buy dishwashing liquid.</font></b>'
+	'<b><font color="red">You need to buy dishwashing liquid before you can wash the dishes.</font></b>'
 end
 
 if eda > 0:
 	if cltarelka = 0 or edahot > 0:$edagot = ''
-	if cltarelka > 0 and edahot = 0:$edagot = '<a href="exec:dynamic $edagotd">Cook meal (0:30)</a>'
+	if cltarelka > 0 and edahot = 0:$edagot = '<a href="exec:dynamic $edagotd">Cook meal</a>'
 
-	'In the refrigerator there''s food, enough for <b><<eda>></b> servings. <<$edagot>>'
+	'There''s enough food in the fridge for <b><<eda>></b> servings. <<$edagot>>'
 end
 
-if edaD = 0 and eda = 0:'<b><font color="red">The refrigerator is empty, you have nothing to eat.</font></b>'
+if edaD = 0 and eda = 0:'<b><font color="red">The refrigerator is empty. You have nothing to eat.</font></b>'
 if posudomashina > 0:'The kitchen has a dishwasher.'
-if edahot > 0:'<a href="exec:dynamic $edahotd">A cooked meal is on the table (0:30).</a>'
+if edahot > 0:'<a href="exec:dynamic $edahotd">A cooked meal is on the table.</a>'
 
 if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10:
 	if hour = 7 or hour = 17:'<a href="exec:gt ''husb'', ''start''">Your husband is eating at the table.</a>'
 end
 
 if husband > 0 and husbanday > 0 and huseatday ! daystart and eda >= 2:
-	act 'Cook a meal for your husband and yourself, 2 servings (1:00)':
+	act 'Cook a meal for your husband and yourself':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		husband += 5
@@ -104,7 +104,7 @@ dynamic $vitamin
 if musor > 3:
 	act 'Take out the trash':
 		if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
-			'I can not go to the trash cans naked!'
+			'You can''t go out to the trash cans naked!'
 		else
 			killvar 'fullmorrout' & minut += 3 & gt 'city_trashplace', 'start'
 		end
@@ -124,51 +124,50 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You climb up on the table and penetrate your pussy with your dildo.'
+				'You climb up on the table and use your dildo to pleasure yourself.'
 
-				if hour = 7 or hour = 17:'<<$husName>> looks at you, obviously a little dumbfounded.'
-				if hour ! 7 or hour ! 17:'Just as you get going <<$husName>> walks into the room.'
+				if hour = 7 or hour = 17:'<<$husName>> looks at you dumbfounded.'
+				if hour ! 7 or hour ! 17:'Just as you get into it, <<$husName>> walks into the room.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				
 				if harakHusb = 0:
-					'"What are you doing?", <<$husName>> asks.'
-					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it and you''re always busy, " you reply, without stopping to masturbate.'
-					'"And how often do you that", he asks.'
-					'"Every now and then, sometimes I put it in the ass too, would you like to watch me?" you ask him'
+					'"What are you doing?" <<$husName>> asks.'
+					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really needed it and you''re always busy!" you reply without stopping.'
+					'"And how often do you that?" he asks.'
+					'"Every now and then. I sometimes put it in my ass too. Would you like to watch?"'
 
 					if izvratH = 0:
 						husband -= 1
-						'"I think I''ll step outside until you are done", he says and leaves the apartment. You continue to satisfy yourself, but are a bit sad, he didn''t ''help'' you.'
-						
+						'"I think I''ll step outside until you''re done." he says and leaves the apartment. You continue to satisfy yourself, but are a little disappointed that he didn''t ''help'' you.'
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
 
 						act 'Finish':gt 'kuhr'
 					elseif izvratH = 1:
-						'"Well, I''m... I''m not sure", he stutters.'
-						'"So, what do you want?", you ask'
+						'"Well, I''m... I''m not sure..." he stutters.'
+						'"So, what do you want?" you ask in response.'
 
 						act 'Put on a show':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m12.jpg"></center>'
-							'You pull out the dildo from your pussy and wink at your husband, then you push the dildo into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely as the dildo moves in and out. You notice the obvious bulge in trousers.'
-							'"Dear, is there anything else you want?", you ask, smiling at him.'
-							'"Can I join?", he asks you a little embarrassed.'
+							'You pull the dildo out of your pussy and wink at him before pushing it into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely and you notice the obvious bulge in his trousers.'
+							'"Is there anything else you want, dear?" you ask with a smile.'
+							'"Can I join you?" he asks, looking a little embarrassed.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 15
 							gs 'stat'
 							
-							act 'Solve':
+							act 'Yes':
 								cla
 								*clr
 								analorgasm += 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m13.jpg"></center>'
-								'<<$husName>> takes out his dick and starts to masturbate right in-front of you, you''re surprised, because you expected he''d to fuck you or something like that a long the line. You sigh silently and continue to fuck your ass with the dildo. <<$husName>> now masturbates furiously, as you moaning becomes louder. Both of you realize, it won''t be long until either of you cums.'
-								'With a final thrust, it''s you, who experiences the first orgasm and it''s so strong, that you fall off the couch onto the floor. You talk your dildo out of your ass and lick it clean, while locking eyes with your husband. He finds this incredibly erotic and it takes him merely a few more seconds to cum, spraying his salty fluids over the couch and carpet. In the after-bliss of both of your orgasms you kiss each other passionately.'
+								'<<$husName>> pulls his dick out and starts to masturbate in front of you. You''re surprised, having expected him to fuck you or ask for a blowjob instead. You sigh silently and continue to fuck your ass with the dildo as <<$husName>> watches and masturbates. You''re close to orgasm, and it sounds like <<$husName>> is too.'
+								'With a final thrust of your dildo, you''re hit by an orgasm so strong that you fall onto the floor. You slide your dildo out of your ass and lick it clean while locking eyes with your husband. He finds this incredibly erotic and his cum starts splattering over the floor. You passionately make out in the aftermath of your orgasms.'
 								
 								$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -179,16 +178,16 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 						end
 					end
 				elseif harakHusb = 1:
-					'"I guess sex with me isn''t enough?", he asks.'
-					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it and you''re always busy", you reply, without stopping to masturbate.'
-					'"Well then, why don''t you show me everything then? I''d love to watch", he says.'
-					'"Do you want to see me putting in my ass too?" you ask'
+					'"I guess sex with me isn''t enough?" he asks.'
+					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really needed it and you''re always busy!" you reply without stopping.'
+					'"Well then, why don''t you show me everything? I''d love to watch!"'
+					'"Do you want to watch me putting it in my ass?" you ask'
 
 					if izvratH = 0:
 						husband += 1
 						husbizvradd += 1
-						'"No, not yet, and that''s enough for now", he says and sits down on a chair. You continue to satisfy yourself rapidly and soon orgasm in front of your husband. <<$husName>> applauds you. "Bravo! Care to do it again?", he says chuckling.'
-						'"Anytime for such a lovely audience, but I need a quick break", you laugh and take the dildo out of your pussy.'
+						'"No, not yet. That''s enough for now." he says as he sits down on a chair. You continue to satisfy yourself and soon orgasm in front of your husband. <<$husName>> applauds you. "Bravo! Care to do it again?" he chuckles.'
+						'"Anytime for such a lovely audience, but I need a quick break." you laugh as you take the dildo out of your pussy.'
 
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -196,16 +195,16 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 						act 'Finish':gt 'kuhr'
 					elseif izvratH = 1:
 						husband += 1
-						'"And what are you going to show me now?", he asks.'
-						'"Whatever you would like to see", you answer.'
+						'"And what are you going to show me now?" he asks.'
+						'"Whatever you want..." you answer teasingly.'
 
 						act 'Put on a show':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m12.jpg"></center>'
-							'You move your dildo slowly into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely as the dildo moves in and out of your ass. You notice the bulge in his pants.'
-							'It''s hard for you not to look at it, therefore you ask him, if he would like to participate somehow.'
-							'"Now that you ask", he says, "you could blow me, while pump that toy into your ass." So he unbuttons his pants and takes his cock out.'
+							'You push the dildo slowly into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely and you notice the bulge in his pants.'
+							'It''s hard for you not to stare at it and you smile. "Need some...help there?" you ask teasingly.'
+							'"Now that you ask..." he says with a wink. "Give me a blowjob while you fuck your ass with that dildo." He unbuttons his pants and pulls his erect cock out.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -214,12 +213,12 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 								cla
 								*clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m14.jpg"></center>'
-								'You start to suck on his flaccid penis, while you continue to pleasure yourself, by pumping that dildo in and out of your ass. After a short while, <<$husName>>s dick became rock hard, when it finally is, he says "Time for me to fuck that hole."'
+								'You start sucking his dick while continuing to pleasure yourself. After a few minutes, <<$husName>> pulls out of your mouth. "Time for me to fuck that hole."'
 
 								gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 								gs 'stat'
 								
-								act 'Anal Sex':
+								act 'Anal':
 									picrand = 88
 									gt 'sex', 'anal'
 									gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -230,12 +229,12 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 					end
 				elseif harakHusb = 2:
 					'"Is your hole itching?" he asks.'
-					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it and you''re always busy", you reply, without stopping to masturbate.'
+					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really needed it and you''re always busy!" you reply without stopping.'
 
 					if izvratH = 0:
 						husband += 1
 						husbizvradd += 1
-						'"Well then, open your mouth", he orders you, pulls out his cock and pushes it into your mouth by force. He holds you by the hair and fucks your mouth, while telling you not to stop masturbating. Soon after he becomes tired of your mouth, "Now take out that damn toy, time for me to scratch your itch."'
+						'"Well then, open your mouth!" he orders as he pulls out his cock and pushes it into your mouth. He holds you by the hair and fucks your mouth while telling you to keep masturbating. After a few minutes, he stops. "Now take out that damn toy. Time for me to scratch your itch!"'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5 
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'rough'
@@ -250,18 +249,18 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 						end
 					elseif izvratH = 1:
 						husband += 1
-						'<<$husName>> orders you to put your toy into your ass and you submissively oblige to do so. "Now open your mouth and suck me off", he tells you.'
+						'<<$husName>> orders you to put your toy into your ass and you submissively comply. "Now open your mouth and suck me off!"'
 
 						act 'Blowjob':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m14.jpg"></center>'
-							'You start to suck on his flaccid penis, while you continue to pleasure yourself, by pumping that dildo in and out of your ass. After a short while, <<$husName>>s dick became rock hard, when it finally is, he says "Time for me to fuck your ass-pussy."'
+							'You start sucking his dick while continuing to pleasure yourself. After a few minutes, <<$husName>> pulls out of your mouth. "Time for me to fuck that hole."'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 							gs 'stat'
 							
-							act 'Anal Sex':
+							act 'Anal':
 								picrand = 87
 								gt 'sex', 'anal'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -272,10 +271,10 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 				end
 			else
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'Unable to control yourself anymore you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time to attach the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before lowering yourself slowly to it''s tip.'
-				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel that thick head spreading your pussy-lips and soon the whole length begin to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when that delicious cock finally bottoms out in your cunt, sending you to the heavens and back.'
-				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts- soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and time again. It takes you just a few minutes to reach that so wanted orgasm, your toes curling tightly as that wonderful feeling run through your entire body...'
-				'Soon you''re twitching onto that dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a smile grows along your face after cumming so hard there. That was just what you needed!'
+				'Unable to control yourself, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time in attaching the suction base of the dildo to the floor before lowering yourself slowly onto it.'
+				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your lips and soon the whole length begins to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when the dildo bottoms out inside you.'
+				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. Your ass is hammering against the floor with each thrust and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as your entire body is overwhelmed in pleasure.'
+				'Your juices drip down the length of the dildo, pooling on the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a satisfied smile grows on your face. That was just what you needed!'
 				
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 				gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10
@@ -285,10 +284,10 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 			end
 		else
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'Unable to control yourself anymore you immediately reach for your dildo so you can finally take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time to attach the suction base of the dildo onto the floor before lowering yourself slowly to it''s tip.'
-			'Shivers run down your spine as you feel that thick head spreading your pussy-lips and soon the whole length begin to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when that delicious cock finally bottoms out in your cunt, sending you to the heavens and back.'
-			'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts- soon hammering your ass against the cold floor time and time again. It takes you just a few minutes to reach that so wanted orgasm, your toes curling tightly as that wonderful feeling run through your entire body...'
-			'Soon you''re twitching onto that dildo and juices drip down its length, soaking the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a smile grows along your face after cumming so hard there. That was just what you needed!'
+			'Unable to control yourself, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time in attaching the suction base of the dildo to the floor before lowering yourself slowly onto it.'
+			'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your lips and soon the whole length begins to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when the dildo bottoms out inside you.'
+			'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. Your ass is hammering against the floor with each thrust and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as your entire body is overwhelmed in pleasure.'
+			'Your juices drip down the length of the dildo, pooling on the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a satisfied smile grows on your face. That was just what you needed!'
 				
 			$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 			gs 'arousal', 'vaginal_dildo', 10

+ 60 - 62
locations/kuhr2x.qsrc

@@ -25,9 +25,9 @@ end
 
 if kransloman = 1:
 	cla
-	'You notice your sink is leaking, unable to fix it yourself you call a plumber.'
-	if Grisha = 0:act 'Call':dynamic $santehnik
-	if Grisha > 0:act 'Call Grisha, the plumber':dynamic $santehnikgr
+	'You notice your sink is leaking. Unable to fix it yourself, you call a plumber.'
+	if Grisha = 0:act 'Call the plumber':dynamic $santehnik
+	if Grisha > 0:act 'Call Grisha':dynamic $santehnikgr
 
 	act 'Leave':gt 'korr'
 
@@ -45,56 +45,50 @@ if posudomashina > 0:
 end
 
 if cltarelka > 0:
-	'Above the sink are <b><<cltarelka>></b> the clean plates'
+	'<b><<cltarelka>></b> clean plates are stored in the cupboard.'
 else
 	'<b><font color = red>You have no clean dishes left.</font></b>'
 end
 
-if dirttarelka > 0:'The sink has <b><<dirttarelka>></b> pieces of dirty dishes. <a href="exec: dynamic $dirtarm ">That can be washed and</a>.'
+if dirttarelka > 0:'<b><<dirttarelka>></b> dirty dishes are lying in the sink. <a href="exec:dynamic $dirtarm">Wash the dishes</a>.'
 
 if fairy > 0:
-	'above the sink is a detergent to wash the dishes with, there is enough for <b><<fairy>></b> time.'
+	'There is dishwashing liquid next to the sink, enough for <b><<fairy>></b> uses.'
 else
-	'<b><font color = red>you do not have any detergent to wash the dishes, you need to buy detergent.</font></b>'
+	'<b><font color="red">You need to buy dishwashing liquid before you can wash the dishes.</font></b>'
 end
 
 if eda > 0:
 	if cltarelka = 0 or edahot > 0:$edagot = ''
-	if cltarelka > 0 and edahot = 0:$edagot = '<a href="exec:dynamic $edagotd">Cook meal (0:30)</a>'
+	if cltarelka > 0 and edahot = 0:$edagot = '<a href="exec:dynamic $edagotd">Cook meal</a>'
 
-	'In the refrigerator there''s enough food for <b><<eda>></b> servings. <<$edagot>>'
+	'There''s enough food in the fridge for <b><<eda>></b> servings. <<$edagot>>'
 end
 
-if edaD = 0 and eda = 0:
-	'<b><font color = red>The refrigerator is completely empty.</font></b>'
-end
-
-if posudomashina > 0:'The kitchen includes a dishwasher.'
-if edahot > 0:'<a href="exec: dynamic $edahotd ">On the table is ready meal.</a>'
+if edaD = 0 and eda = 0:'<b><font color="red">The refrigerator is empty. You have nothing to eat.</font></b>'
+if posudomashina > 0:'The kitchen has a dishwasher.'
+if edahot > 0:'<a href="exec:dynamic $edahotd">A cooked meal is on the table.</a>'
 
 if husband > 0 and husbandrink ! 10:
 	if hour = 7 or hour = 17:
-		'<a href="exec: gt''husb'',''start'' ">At the table your husband is eating.</a>'
+		'<a href="exec:gt ''husb'', ''start''">Your husband is eating at the table.</a>'
 	end
 end
 
 if husband > 0 and husbanday > 0 and huseatday ! daystart and eda >= 2:
-	act 'Cook meal for your husband and yourself (1hr, 2 potions of food)':
+	act 'Cook meal for your husband and yourself':
 		cla
 		*clr
 		husband += 5
 		eda -= 2
 		dynamic $edahotd
 		minut += 60
-
-
-		huseatday = daystart
+        huseatday = daystart
 		pcs_mood -= 25
+        '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/kitchen/cook.jpg"></center>'
+		'You cook a meal for your husband and yourself.'
 
-		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/home/kitchen/cook.jpg"></center>'
-		'You cooked a meal for your husband and served it at the table on plates.'
-
-		act 'Move away from the plate for the':gt'kuhr2x'
+		act 'Leave the meal':gt'kuhr2x'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -122,51 +116,50 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 				cla
 				*clr
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m1.jpg"></center>'
-				'You climb up on the table and penetrate your pussy with your dildo.'
+				'You climb up on the table and use your dildo to pleasure yourself.'
 
-				if hour = 7 or hour = 17:'<<$husName>> looks at you, obviously a little dumbfounded.'
-				if hour ! 7 or hour ! 17:'Just as you get going <<$husName>> walks into the room.'
+				if hour = 7 or hour = 17:'<<$husName>> looks at you dumbfounded.'
+				if hour ! 7 or hour ! 17:'Just as you get into it, <<$husName>> walks into the room.'
 
 				gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				
 				if harakHusb = 0:
-					'"What are you doing?", <<$husName>> asks.'
-					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it and you''re always busy, " you reply, without stopping masturbating.'
-					'"And how often do you do that?", he asks.'
-					'"Every now and then, sometimes I put it in the ass too, would you like to watch me?" you ask him'
+					'"What are you doing?" <<$husName>> asks.'
+					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really needed it and you''re always busy!" you reply without stopping.'
+					'"And how often do you that?" he asks.'
+					'"Every now and then. I sometimes put it in my ass too. Would you like to watch?"'
 
 					if izvratH = 0:
 						husband -= 1
-						'"I think I''ll step outside until you are done", he says and leaves the apartment. You continue to satisfy yourself, but are a bit sad, he didn''t ''help'' you out.'
-						
+						'"I think I''ll step outside until you''re done." he says and leaves the apartment. You continue to satisfy yourself, but are a little disappointed that he didn''t ''help'' you.'
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'arousal', 'end'
 						gs 'stat'
 
 						act 'Finish':gt 'kuhr2x'
 					elseif izvratH = 1:
-						'"Well, I''m... I''m not sure", he stutters.'
-						'"So, what do you want?", you ask'
+						'"Well, I''m... I''m not sure..." he stutters.'
+						'"So, what do you want?" you ask in response.'
 
 						act 'Put on a show':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m12.jpg"></center>'
-							'You pull out the dildo from your pussy and wink at your husband, then you push the dildo into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely as the dildo moves in and out. You notice the obvious bulge in his trousers.'
-							'"Dear, is there anything else you want?", you ask, smiling at him.'
-							'"Can I join?", he asks you a little embarrassed.'
+							'You pull the dildo out of your pussy and wink at him before pushing it into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely and you notice the obvious bulge in his trousers.'
+							'"Is there anything else you want, dear?" you ask with a smile.'
+							'"Can I join you?" he asks, looking a little embarrassed.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 15
 							gs 'stat'
 							
-							act 'Solve':
+							act 'Yes':
 								cla
 								*clr
 								analorgasm += 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m13.jpg"></center>'
-								'<<$husName>> takes out his dick and starts to masturbate right in front of you, you''re surprised, because you expected he''d want to fuck you or something like that along the line. You sigh silently and continue to fuck your ass with the dildo. <<$husName>> now masturbates furiously, as your moaning becomes louder. Both of you realize, it won''t be long until either of you cums.'
-								'With a final thrust, it''s you, who experiences the first orgasm and it''s so strong, that you fall off the couch onto the floor. You take the dildo out of your ass and lick it clean, while locking eyes with your husband. He finds this incredibly erotic and it takes him merely a few more seconds before he cums, spraying his salty fluids all over the couch and carpet. In the afterbliss of both of your orgasms you kiss each other passionately.'
+								'<<$husName>> pulls his dick out and starts to masturbate in front of you. You''re surprised, having expected him to fuck you or ask for a blowjob instead. You sigh silently and continue to fuck your ass with the dildo as <<$husName>> watches and masturbates. You''re close to orgasm, and it sounds like <<$husName>> is too.'
+								'With a final thrust of your dildo, you''re hit by an orgasm so strong that you fall onto the floor. You slide your dildo out of your ass and lick it clean while locking eyes with your husband. He finds this incredibly erotic and his cum starts splattering over the floor. You passionately make out in the aftermath of your orgasms.'
 
 								$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -177,16 +170,16 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 						end
 					end
 				elseif harakHusb = 1:
-					'"I guess sex with me isn''t enough?", he asks.'
-					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it and you''re always busy", you reply, without stopping to masturbate.'
-					'"Well then, why don''t you show me everything then? I''d love to watch", he says.'
-					'"Do you want to see me putting it in my ass too?" you ask'
+					'"I guess sex with me isn''t enough?" he asks.'
+					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really needed it and you''re always busy!" you reply without stopping.'
+					'"Well then, why don''t you show me everything? I''d love to watch!"'
+					'"Do you want to watch me putting it in my ass?" you ask'
 
 					if izvratH = 0:
 						husband += 1
 						husbizvradd += 1
-						'"No, not yet, and that''s enough for now", he says and sits down on a chair. You continue to satisfy yourself rapidly and soon orgasm in front of your husband. <<$husName>> applauds you. "Bravo! Care to do it again?", he says chuckling.'
-						'"Anytime for such a lovely audience, but I need a quick break", you laugh and take the dildo out of your pussy.'
+						'"No, not yet. That''s enough for now." he says as he sits down on a chair. You continue to satisfy yourself and soon orgasm in front of your husband. <<$husName>> applauds you. "Bravo! Care to do it again?" he chuckles.'
+						'"Anytime for such a lovely audience, but I need a quick break." you laugh as you take the dildo out of your pussy.'
 
 						$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 						gs 'stat'
@@ -194,16 +187,16 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 						act 'Finish':gt 'kuhr2x'
 					elseif izvratH = 1:
 						husband += 1
-						'"And what are you going to show me now?", he asks.'
-						'"Whatever you would like to see", you answer.'
+						'"And what are you going to show me now?" he asks.'
+						'"Whatever you want..." you answer teasingly.'
 
 						act 'Put on a show':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m12.jpg"></center>'
-							'You move your dildo slowly into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely as the dildo moves in and out of your ass. You notice the bulge in his pants.'
-							'It''s hard for you not to look at it, therefore you ask him, if he would like to participate somehow.'
-							'"Now that you ask", he says, "you could blow me, while pumping that toy into your ass." He unbuttons his pants and takes his cock out.'
+							'You push the dildo slowly into your ass. <<$husName>> watches closely and you notice the bulge in his pants.'
+							'It''s hard for you not to stare at it and you smile. "Need some...help there?" you ask teasingly.'
+							'"Now that you ask..." he says with a wink. "Give me a blowjob while you fuck your ass with that dildo." He unbuttons his pants and pulls his erect cock out.'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'anal_dildo', 5
 							gs 'stat'
@@ -212,12 +205,12 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 								cla
 								*clr
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m14.jpg"></center>'
-								'You start to suck on his flaccid penis, while you continue to pleasure yourself, by pumping that dildo in and out of your ass. After a short while, <<$husName>>s dick became rock hard, "Time for me to fuck that hole." he says.'
+								'You start sucking his dick while continuing to pleasure yourself. After a few minutes, <<$husName>> pulls out of your mouth. "Time for me to fuck that hole."'
 
 								gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 								gs 'stat'
 								
-								act 'Anal Sex':
+								act 'Anal':
 									picrand = 88
 									gt 'sex', 'anal'
 									gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -228,12 +221,12 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 					end
 				elseif harakHusb = 2:
 					'"Is your hole itching?" he asks.'
-					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really need it and you''re always busy", you reply, without stopping to masturbate.'
+					'"I''m sorry dear, but I really needed it and you''re always busy!" you reply without stopping.'
 
 					if izvratH = 0:
 						husband += 1
 						husbizvradd += 1
-						'"Well then, open your mouth", he orders you, as he pulls out his cock and pushes it into your mouth by force. He holds you by the hair and fucks your mouth, while telling you not to stop masturbating. Soon after he becomes tired of your mouth, "Now take out that damn toy, time for me to scratch your itch."'
+						'"Well then, open your mouth!" he orders as he pulls out his cock and pushes it into your mouth. He holds you by the hair and fucks your mouth while telling you to keep masturbating. After a few minutes, he stops. "Now take out that damn toy. Time for me to scratch your itch!"'
 
 						gs 'arousal', 'masturbate', 5 
 						gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'rough'
@@ -248,18 +241,18 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 						end
 					elseif izvratH = 1:
 						husband += 1
-						'<<$husName>> orders you to put your toy into your ass and you submissively oblige to do so. "Now open your mouth and suck me off", he tells you.'
+						'<<$husName>> orders you to put your toy into your ass and you submissively comply. "Now open your mouth and suck me off!"'
 
 						act 'Blowjob':
 							cla
 							*clr
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/husband/sex/m14.jpg"></center>'
-							'You start to suck on his flaccid penis, while you continue to pleasure yourself, by pumping that dildo in and out of your ass. After a short while, <<$husName>>s dick became rock hard, "Time for me to fuck your ass-pussy." he says.'
+							'You start sucking his dick while continuing to pleasure yourself. After a few minutes, <<$husName>> pulls out of your mouth. "Time for me to fuck that hole."'
 
 							gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'sub'
 							gs 'stat'
 							
-							act 'Anal Sex':
+							act 'Anal':
 								picrand = 87
 								gt 'sex', 'anal'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -272,8 +265,10 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 				pcs_horny = 0
 				orgasm += 1
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-				'You put your dildo on the floor and start riding it. It moves in and out and you feel pleasure running through your entire body with each thrust. You begin to moan and a few minutes later you climax as a wave of pleasure runs through your entire body.'
-
+				'Unable to control yourself, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time in attaching the suction base of the dildo to the floor before lowering yourself slowly onto it.'
+				'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your lips and soon the whole length begins to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when the dildo bottoms out inside you.'
+				'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. Your ass is hammering against the floor with each thrust and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as your entire body is overwhelmed in pleasure.'
+				'Your juices drip down the length of the dildo, pooling on the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a satisfied smile grows on your face. That was just what you needed!'
 				$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -282,7 +277,10 @@ if dildo > 0 and pcs_horny >= 50:
 			end
 		else
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/mast/mastr.mp4"></video></center>'
-			'You put your dildo on the floor and start riding it. It moves in and out and you feel pleasure running through your entire body with each thrust. You begin to moan and a few minutes later you climax as a wave of pleasure runs through your entire body.'
+			'Unable to control yourself, you immediately reach for your dildo so you can take care of your lustful desires. You waste no time in attaching the suction base of the dildo to the floor before lowering yourself slowly onto it.'
+			'Shivers run down your spine as you feel the thick head spreading your lips and soon the whole length begins to slide deep inside your hole. A throaty moan overwhelms the room when the dildo bottoms out inside you.'
+			'After shifting your legs and getting more comfortable, you start to rock your hips and bounce on it, moaning louder and louder as you keep increasing the power and pace of your thrusts. Your ass is hammering against the floor with each thrust and it takes you just a few minutes to reach orgasm, your toes curling tightly as your entire body is overwhelmed in pleasure.'
+			'Your juices drip down the length of the dildo, pooling on the floor beneath you. You take a few deep breaths and a satisfied smile grows on your face. That was just what you needed!'
 
 			$orgasm_or = 'yes'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'

+ 31 - 32
locations/kuhrPar.qsrc

@@ -59,7 +59,7 @@ elseif hour = 18 and minut <= 30 and indorf = 0 and anyaloc ! 25:
 elseif hour = 18 and minut <= 30 and indorf = 0:
 	'<a href="exec:gt''father''">Your stepfather</a>, <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a> and <a href="exec:gt ''brother'', ''start''">Kolka</a> are sitting at the table eating dinner. You could sit down and join them for dinner or just grab something and go.'
 else
-	'The kitchen is not very impressive, but it has everything your family needs. Since everyone can''t always join for family meals, <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> usually pre-cooks some meals and stores them in the fridge. Of course, you could also just have a snack if you''re not that hungry.'
+	'The kitchen is not very impressive, but it has everything your family needs. Since everyone can''t always join for family meals, your <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> usually pre-cooks some meals and stores them in the fridge. Of course, you could also just have a snack if you''re not that hungry.'
 end
 if momloc = 11: 'Your <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a> is here making diner.'
 if momloc = 13: 'Your <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a> is here cleaning up after dinner.'
@@ -68,7 +68,7 @@ if momloc = 23: 'Your <a href="exec:gt''mother''"><<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>></a>
 if sdadloc = 4: '<a href="exec:gt''father''">Your stepfather</a> is here reading the paper.'
 if sdadloc = 7: '<a href="exec:gt''father''">Your stepfather</a> is here setting the table for dinner.'
 
-if week = 6 and dostupindorf = 1 and grandaQW['block'] = 0 and hour > 9 and hour < 12:'Your family is getting ready to go to <a href="exec:gt ''gadhouse'', ''to_gadukino''">Gadukino</a> to visit your great grandparents. You can go with them if you want, or stay home like Anya usually does.'
+if week = 6 and dostupindorf = 1 and grandaQW['block'] = 0 and hour > 9 and hour < 12:'Your parents are getting ready to go to <a href="exec:gt ''gadhouse'', ''to_gadukino''">Gadukino</a> to visit your great grandparents. You can go with them if you want, or stay home like Anya usually does.'
 
 if hour = 7 and breakfast_day ! daystart and indorf = 0: 
 	if PCloswimwear ! 1 and $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
@@ -79,34 +79,34 @@ if hour = 7 and breakfast_day ! daystart and indorf = 0:
 			breakfast_day = daystart
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/breakfasthome.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you sit down and join your family for breakfast, you stepfather asks. "How are you doing in school <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
+			'As you sit down and join your family for breakfast, your stepfather enages you in conversation. "How are you doing in school <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 			if kanikuli = 0 and StoryLine > 0 and SchoolAtestat = 0 and SchoolBlock = 0:
 				if pcs_grades >= 80:
-					'You smile to him. "Really great. We were just learning something interesting the other day." You go on to talk about some of the stuff you have learned recently in school. He just nods, while you mother gives you a proud smile, Kolka just rolls his eyes.'
-					'The rest of breakfast is taken up with some small talk about what everyone has been up to of late, you thoroughly enjoy your breakfast with your family.'
+					'You smile at him. "Really great. We were just learning something interesting the other day." You go on to talk about some of the stuff you have learned recently in school. He just nods, while your mother gives you a proud smile and Kolka rolls his eyes.'
+					'The rest of breakfast is taken up with some small talk about what everyone has been up to of late. You thoroughly enjoy your breakfast with your family.'
 				else
-					'You glance to him. "Um ok, I guess." You notice your mother frowning at you, so you quickly try to change the subject, but they won''t let you. You do your best to make them think you are doing better than you are, but neither seem to have bought it. Kolka snickers at you getting grilled.'
-					'The rest of breakfast is taken up with talk about how Kolka is doing in school. He seems to be doing better than you and is showered with praise from your mother and stepfather. The food is good, even if the conversation wasn''t the best. You quickly finish your meal.'
+					'You glance at him. "Um okay, I guess..." You notice your mother frowning at you, so you quickly try to change the subject, but they won''t let you. You do your best to make them think you''re doing better than you are, but they don''t buy it. Kolka snickers at you getting grilled.'
+					'The rest of breakfast is taken up talking about how Kolka is doing in school. He seems to be doing better than you and is showered with praise from your mother and stepfather. The food is good, even if the conversation wasn''t the best. You quickly finish your meal.'
 				end
 			else
 				if kanikuli <> 0:
-					'You smile to him. "I am enjoying some time away from school to hang out with my friends. Just to relax for a change."'
-					'Then your mother speaks up. "It wouldn''t hurt you to study your school books and get ahead of your courses to get better grades." You roll your eyes, but before you can respond, your stepfather lays his hand on your mother''s. "Let her enjoy herself. This is her last year before she goes to university after all." he says with a little emphasis. You just sigh and nod as you both know that is what your mother wants.'
+					'You smile at him. "I''m enjoying some time away from school hanging out with my friends. It''s nice to just relax for a change."'
+					'Your mother speaks up. "It wouldn''t hurt to study your school books and get ahead of your courses to get better grades." You roll your eyes, but before you can respond, your stepfather lays his hand on your mother''s. "Let her enjoy herself. This is her last year before she goes to university after all." he says with a little emphasis. You just sigh and nod as you both know that is what your mother wants.'
 				else 
-					'Vladamir looks over at you. "So have you found a cute boy that is head over heels in love with you, wanting to take you out on dates and buy you stuff yet?" he says in a slightly teasing tone. You mother smacks his arm. "She is too young for that! She needs to focus on school."'
-					'You are about to answer, but Kolka chimes in. "Like any boy would want to be seen with her." This earns him a playful punch on the arm from you and before long, you are all bantering at the table.'
+					'Vladamir looks over at you. "So have you found a cute boy that is head over heels in love with you, wanting to take you out on dates and buy you stuff yet?" he says in a slightly teasing tone and your mother smacks his arm. "She''s too young for that! She needs to focus on school."'
+					'You are about to answer, but Kolka chimes in. "Like any boy would want to be seen with her!" This earns him a playful punch on the arm from you and before long, you are all bantering at the table.'
 				end
 			end
 			act 'Get up from the table': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
 	else
-		act 'Eat breakfast with your family (0:20)': 
+		act 'Eat breakfast with your family': 
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/breakfasthome.jpg"></center>'
-			'Everyone stares at you as you sit down for breakfast.  "What?" You exclaim.'
+			'Everyone stares at you as you sit down for breakfast. "What?" you exclaim.'
 			*nl
-			'Your mother stands up from her seat, nearly knocking her chair over in the process.  "What the hell <<$pcs_nickname>>!"  "Do you have no shame?"  "Get dressed immediately young lady!"'
+			'Your mother stands up from her seat, nearly knocking her chair over in the process. "What on God''s earth are you doing <<$pcs_nickname>>?! Have you have no shame? Get dressed immediately young lady!"'
 			act 'Leave':
 				killvar 'fullmorrout'
 				gt 'korrPar'
@@ -115,42 +115,42 @@ if hour = 7 and breakfast_day ! daystart and indorf = 0:
 	end
 elseif hour = 18 and minut <= 30 and dinner_day ! daystart and indorf = 0: 
 	if PCloswimwear ! 1 and $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
-		act 'Eat dinner with your family (0:20)': 
+		act 'Eat dinner with your family': 
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'food', 'family_meals', 'dinner'
 			npc_rel['A29'] += 1
 			dinner_day = daystart
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/dinnerhome.jpg"></center>'
-			'As you sit down and join your family for dinner, you stepfather asks. "So <<$pcs_nickname>>, do you have a boyfriend yet?"'
+			'You sit down and join your family for dinner and your stepfather starts teasing you. "So, do you have a boyfriend yet <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 			if fame['pav_slut'] > 150 and motherKnowSpravka = 0:
-				'You start to respond to him when your mother interrupts. "Of course not! She is still too young to be thinking about boys."'
-				'Koka then chimes in. "Like any boy would date her when she sucks them all off anyways."'
-				'You mother turns towards Kolka. "That''s not funny! Apologize to your sister right now! Right now!" Anya just smirks.'
-				'Kolka freezes in place, but seeing that she is pissed he decides he doesn''t want to be the one to tell her about your reputation and just says. "Sorry."'
+				'You''re about to respond when your mother interrupts you. "Of course not! She''s still too young to be thinking about boys!"'
+				'Kolka then chimes in. "Like any boy would date her when she sucks them all off anyways."'
+				'You mother turns towards Kolka. "That''s not funny! Apologize to your sister right now! Right now!"' 
+				'Anya smirks as Kolka freezes in place and decides he doesn''t want to be the one to tell her about your reputation and just apologizes to you.'
 				'Your stepfather clears his throat and quickly changes the subject, talking about how his work went. After that, you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
 			elseif fame['pav_slut'] > 150:
-				'You start to respond to him when your mother interrupts. "She is too young to worry about that and... we talked about it." She gives you a meaningful glance and you shut your mouth.'
+				'You''re about to respond when your mother interrupts you. "She''s too young to worry about that and... we talked about it." She gives you a meaningful glance and you shut your mouth.'
 				'Kolka then chimes in. "Like any boy would date her when she sucks them all off anyways."'
-				'You mother turns towards Kolka. "That''s not funny." Then she glances at you. "She might have made some mistakes, but she is trying to be a better girl now. Now apologize to your sister right now!" Anya just smirks.'
-				'Kolka freezes in place. "Sorry."'
+				'You mother turns towards Kolka. "That''s not funny!" She then glances at you. "She might have made some mistakes, but she''s trying to be a better girl now. Now apologize to your sister right now!"' 
+				'Anya just smirks as Kolka freezes in place and apologizes to you.'
 				'Your stepfather clears his throat and quickly changes the subject, talking about how his work went. After that, you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
 			else
-				'You start to respond to him when your mother interrupts. "Of course not, she is still too young to be thinking about boys."'
-				'Your stepfather sighs a little. "She is old enough to start dating dear."'
-				'You mother gives him a hard look. "No, she isn''t. She needs to focus on school and then going to the University before she can start thinking about boys."'
+				'You''re about to respond when your mother interrupts you. "Of course not! She''s still too young to be thinking about boys!"'
+				'Your stepfather sighs. "She''s old enough to start dating, dear."'
+				'You mother gives him a hard stare. "No, she isn''t. She needs to focus on school and then university before she can start thinking about boys."'
 				'You stepfather decides to drop it and start talking about some of the stuff that happened at his work. All and all, you have a fairly enjoyable dinner.'
 			end
 			act 'Get up from the table': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end
 	else
-		act 'Eat dinner with your family (0:20)': 
+		act 'Eat dinner with your family': 
 			*clr & cla
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/apartment/home/dinnerhome.jpg"></center>'
-			'Everyone stares at you as you sit down for dinner.  "What?" You exclaim.'
+			'Everyone stares at you as you sit down for dinner.  "What?" you exclaim.'
 			*nl
-			'Your mother stands up from her seat, nearly knocking her chair over in the process.  "What the hell <<$pcs_nickname>>!"  "Do you have no shame?"  "Get dressed immediately young lady!"'
+			'Your mother stands up from her seat, nearly knocking her chair over in the process. "What on God''s earth are you doing <<$pcs_nickname>>?! Have you have no shame? Get dressed immediately young lady!"'
 			act 'Leave':
 				killvar 'fullmorrout'
 				gt 'korrPar'
@@ -159,7 +159,7 @@ elseif hour = 18 and minut <= 30 and dinner_day ! daystart and indorf = 0:
 	end
 else
 	if (hour = 8 or (hour = 7 and indorf = 1)) and breakfast_day ! daystart:
-		act 'Eat breakfast alone (0:15)':
+		act 'Eat breakfast alone':
 			*clr & cla
 			menu_off = 1
 			breakfast_day = daystart
@@ -168,8 +168,7 @@ else
 			minut -= 5
 			gs 'stat'			
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/food/breakfast_'+rand(0,1)+'.jpg"></center>'
-			'You enjoy a nice and quiet breakfast. The portions were moderate and<<$mtxt>>'
-			'You accompany it with a mug of tea.'
+			'You enjoy a quiet breakfast by yourself. The portions were moderate and <<$mtxt>>. You accompany it with a mug of tea.'
 			
 			act 'Get up from the table': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		end