Proofread gas station

locations/zaprF.qsrc

@@ -17,11 +17,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/gas/gazprom_day.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 	'The local gas station, the cheap pumps are limited in functionality and will always fill the tank up completely.'
-	*nl
-	'When the weather is nice, sometimes girls will offer a car washing service for some tips. There''s no structure to it, so you could always try it.'
 	'The petrol price is 30 <b>₽</b> per liter.'
 	*nl
-
+	'When the weather is nice, girls will sometimes offer a car washing service for some tips. There''s no structure to it, so you could always try it.'
+	
 	act 'Leave':
 		if litltown = 0:
 			minut += 5
@@ -33,7 +32,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	end
 
 	if temper < 10:
-		'It''s too cold outside to wash cars. You''re more likely to get ill than make money. Maybe try again when the weather is warmer?'
+		'It''s too cold to wash cars. You''re more likely to get ill than make money. Maybe try again when the weather is warmer?'
 	elseif sunWeather = 0:
 		'You can''t wash cars if it''s raining outside! Maybe try again on a sunny day?'
 	elseif hour < 8:
@@ -41,22 +40,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	elseif hour >= 21:
 		'It''s too late to wash cars.'
 	else
-		act 'Wash car windows (1:00)':gt 'zaprFWash', 'start'
+		act 'Wash car windows (1:00)': gt 'zaprFWash', 'start'
 	end
-	act 'Go to the toilet':gt 'zaprF', 'toilet'
+	act 'Go to the toilet': gt 'zaprF', 'toilet'
 
 	if car > 0:
 		if cardrive = 6 and litltown = 0: 'Your <a href="exec: gs ''carF'', ''start''"><<$car>></a> is parked here.'
 		if cardrive = 21 and litltown = 1: 'Your <a href="exec: gs ''carF'', ''start''"><<$car>></a> is parked here.'
 	
 		if kanistra < 5:
-			act 'Buy a canister and fill it with 5 liters of gasoline for 150 <b>₽</b>':
+			act 'Buy a canister and fill it with 5 liters of gasoline (150 <b>₽</b>)':
 				cla
 				kanistra += 1
 				money -= 150
 				'You buy a canister of gasoline. (It will automatically be put in the trunk of your car)'
 
-				act 'Disengage from the pump':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+				act 'Disengage from the pump': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 			end
 		end
 
@@ -65,8 +64,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 			if zprbenz * 30 <= money:
 				act 'Fill the tank with petrol':
-					cla
-					*clr
+					*clr & cla
 					benz = 50
 					zprpay = zprbenz * 30
 					money -= zprpay
@@ -78,7 +76,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 
 					'You fill the tank and pay <<zprpay>> <b>₽</b>.'
 
-					act 'Disengage from the pump':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+					act 'Disengage from the pump': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 				end
 			else
 				'You do not have enough money to refuel your car.'
@@ -106,7 +104,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'toilet':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/bathroom/toilet.jpg"></center>'
 	'You are in a dirty gas station toilet. At least it provides some privacy.'
 
-	act 'Leave the restroom':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+	act 'Leave the restroom': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 
 	act 'Look in the mirror': gt 'mirror', 'start'
 	if pcs_hairbsh < 1: act 'Brush your hair': gt 'mirror', 'brush'

locations/zaprFWash.qsrc

@@ -16,10 +16,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 		pcs_mood -= 5
 		gs 'fame', 'pav', 'sex', rand(0,2)
 		
-		'The gas station worker chases you away: "At least go wash yourself off first, whore!"'
+		'The gas station worker chases you away. "At least wash yourself off first, whore!"'
 		
-		act 'Leave':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
-		act 'Go to the toilet':gt 'zaprF', 'toilet'
+		act 'Leave': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+		act 'Go to the toilet': gt 'zaprF', 'toilet'
 	else
 		gt 'zaprFWash', 'wash'
 	end
@@ -93,60 +93,60 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'flash_passing':
 	act 'Continue':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 	if PCloPants > 0 or PCloSkirt > 0:
-		if pcs_inhib >= 35: act 'Flash your tits at passing cars':gt 'zaprFWash', 'titsFlash', 'Free', 'Flash'
-		if exhibitionist_lvl > 0: act 'Flash your ass at passing cars':gt 'zaprFWash', 'assFlash', 'Free', 'Flash'
-		if exhibitionist_lvl > 1: act 'Flash your pussy at passing cars':gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyFlash', 'Free', 'Flash'
+		if pcs_inhib >= 35: act 'Flash your tits at passing cars': gt 'zaprFWash', 'titsFlash', 'Free', 'Flash'
+		if exhibitionist_lvl > 0: act 'Flash your ass at passing cars': gt 'zaprFWash', 'assFlash', 'Free', 'Flash'
+		if exhibitionist_lvl > 1: act 'Flash your pussy at passing cars': gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyFlash', 'Free', 'Flash'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'titsQ':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/bimboclean' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	'Want to earn some more cash, girl? Show me your tits. I''ll give you 50 <b>₽</b>. It''s easy money.'
+	'"Want to earn some more cash, girl? Show me your tits and I''ll give you 50 <b>₽</b>. It''s easy money."'
 	
 	! inhibition or exhibitionism requirements needed to accept the offer or just have fun with him
-	if exhibitionist_lvl > 0 or pcs_inhib >= 35 or pcs_horny >= 40: act 'Agree and show him your tits':gt 'zaprFWash', 'titsFlash', 'Paid', 'Question'
-	act 'Refuse':gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
+	if exhibitionist_lvl > 0 or pcs_inhib >= 35 or pcs_horny >= 40: act 'Agree': gt 'zaprFWash', 'titsFlash', 'Paid', 'Question'
+	act 'Refuse': gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'assQ':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/bimboclean' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	'What a nice ass you have there. Let me see it. Will 50 <b>₽</b> convince you to show it to me?'
+	'"What a nice ass you have there. Will 50 <b>₽</b> convince you to show it to me?"'
 	
 	! inhibition or exhibitionism requirements needed to accept the offer or just have fun with him
-	if exhibitionist_lvl > 0 or pcs_horny >= 60: act 'Agree and show him your ass':gt 'zaprFWash', 'assFlash', 'Paid', 'Question'
-	act 'Refuse':gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
+	if exhibitionist_lvl > 0 or pcs_horny >= 60: act 'Agree': gt 'zaprFWash', 'assFlash', 'Paid', 'Question'
+	act 'Refuse': gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'pussyQ':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/bimboclean' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	'You look like a cool girl. Let me see your pussy. I''ll give you 50 <b>₽</b>.'
-		
+	'"You look like a cool girl. Let me see your pussy and I''ll give you 50 <b>₽</b>."'
+
 	! inhibition or exhibitionism requirements needed to accept the offer or just have fun with him
-	if exhibitionist_lvl > 1 or pcs_horny >= 80: act 'Agree and show him your pussy':gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyFlash', 'Paid', 'Question'
-	act 'Refuse':gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
+	if exhibitionist_lvl > 1 or pcs_horny >= 80: act 'Agree': gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyFlash', 'Paid', 'Question'
+	act 'Refuse': gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'handQ':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/bimboclean' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	'Could you help me out girl? It''s getting tight down here in my pants just looking at you. How about you touch it a bit? I''ll pay you 200 <b>₽</b>.'
+	'"Could you help me out, girl? It''s getting tight down here in my pants just looking at you. How about you... help me out? I''ll pay you 200 <b>₽</b>."'
 	
 	! slut or horny requirements needed to accept the offer or just have fun with him
-	if slut_compare >= 25 or pcs_horny >= 25: act 'Agree and give him a handjob':gt 'zaprFWash', 'handjob', 'Paid'
-	act 'Refuse':gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
+	if slut_compare >= 25 or pcs_horny >= 25: act 'Give him a handjob': gt 'zaprFWash', 'handjob', 'Paid'
+	act 'Refuse': gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'blowQ':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/bimboclean' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	
-	'Looking hot today girl! How about you put your mouth to good use? I''ll pay you 200 <b>₽</b>.'
+	'"Looking hot today, girl! How about you put your mouth to good use? I''ll pay you 200 <b>₽</b>."'
 	
 	! slut or horny requirements needed to accept the offer or just have fun with him
-	if slut_compare >= 30 or pcs_horny >= 30: act 'Agree and give him a blowjob':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjob', 'Paid', 'Question'
-	act 'Refuse':gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
+	if slut_compare >= 30 or pcs_horny >= 30: act 'Give him a blowjob': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjob', 'Paid', 'Question'
+	act 'Refuse': gt 'zaprFWash', 'refuse'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'refuse':
@@ -157,9 +157,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'refuse':
 	
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/pc/reactions/no.mp4"></video></center>'
 	
-	'You begin to consider his offer but decide to turn him down and walk away.'
+	'You consider his offer, but decide to turn him down and walk away.'
 	
-	act 'Go back to washing cars':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+	act 'Go back to washing cars': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 end
 
 ! $ARGS[1] = whether you got paid for this
@@ -181,12 +181,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'titsFlash':
 	gs 'stat'
 	
 	! chance for using photos or videos
-	if rand(1, 100) < 50:
-		i = rand(1, 100)
+	if rand(1,100) < 50:
+		i = rand(1,100)
 		! chance of using old pics since there are so many newer pics to choose from
 		if i < 15:
 			if PCloPants > 0:
-				i = rand(1, 2)
+				i = rand(1,2)
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/pants/titsflash<<i>>.jpg"></center>'
 			elseif PCloSkirt > 0:
 				i = 1
@@ -202,25 +202,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'titsFlash':
 		end
 	else
 		if PCloPants > 0:
-			i = rand(1, 4)
+			i = rand(1,4)
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/pants/titsflash<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 		elseif PCloSkirt > 0:
-			i = rand(1, 3)
+			i = rand(1,3)
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/skirt/titsflash<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
 	end
 	
 	! text differences depending on whether you were paid, whether you are flashing for a customer or for the cars on the road, and what type of clothing you are wearing
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'Paid':
-		if PCloPants > 0:'You lift up your top and show him your breasts for a few seconds. Then you quickly cover up and take your money.'
-		if PCloSkirt > 0:'You pull down your top and show him your breasts for a few seconds. Then you quickly cover up and take your money.'
+		if PCloPants > 0: 'You lift up your top and show him your breasts for a few seconds before quickly covering up and taking your money.'
+		if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You pull down your top and show him your breasts for a few seconds before quickly covering up and taking your money.'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'Free':
 		if $ARGS[2] = 'Question':
-			if PCloPants > 0:'You lift up your top and show him your breasts for a few seconds. You give your breasts a little shake for him before you cover up.'
-			if PCloSkirt > 0:'You pull down your top and show him your breasts for a few seconds. You give your breasts a little shake for him before you cover up.'
+			if PCloPants > 0: 'You lift up your top and show him your breasts for a few seconds. You give your breasts a little shake for him before you cover up.'
+			if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You pull down your top and show him your breasts for a few seconds. You give your breasts a little shake for him before you cover up.'
 		elseif $ARGS[2] = 'Flash':
-			if PCloPants > 0:'You lift up your top and expose your breasts to the road for a few seconds. A couple cars pass by and honk in appreciation. You give your breasts a little shake before you cover up.'
-			if PCloSkirt > 0:'You pull down your top and expose your breasts to the road for a few seconds. A couple cars pass by and honk in appreciation. You give your breasts a little shake before you cover up.'
+			if PCloPants > 0: 'You lift up your top and expose your breasts to the road for a few seconds. A few cars pass by and honk in appreciation as you give your breasts a little shake before covering up.'
+			if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You pull down your top and expose your breasts to the road for a few seconds. A few cars pass by and honk in appreciation as you give your breasts a little shake before covering up.'
 		end
 	end
 	gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 5
@@ -234,13 +234,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'titsFlash':
 		! once again dynamically choosing the next scene to play based on reputation
 		carwashscene = rand(1, 100)
 		if carwashscene <= min(max(30,slut_compare),60) and carwashscene >= 50:
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyQ'	
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyQ'	
 		elseif carwashscene <= min(max(60,slut_compare),80) and carwashscene >= 60:	
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'handQ'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'handQ'
 		elseif carwashscene <= min(max(80,slut_compare),100) and carwashscene >= 80:	
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowQ'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowQ'
 		else
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'assQ'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'assQ'
 		end
 	! flashing for cars just allows you to return to the gas station
 	else
@@ -268,8 +268,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'assFlash':
 	pcs_mood += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	if rand(1, 100) < 50:
-		i = rand(1, 100)
+	if rand(1,100) < 50:
+		i = rand(1,100)
 		if i < 10:
 			if PCloPants > 0:
 				i = 1
@@ -287,24 +287,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'assFlash':
 		end
 	else
 		if PCloPants > 0:
-			i = rand(1, 3)
+			i = rand(1,3)
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/pants/assflash<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 		elseif PCloSkirt > 0:
-			i = rand(1, 2)
+			i = rand(1,2)
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/skirt/assflash<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 		end
 	end
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'Paid':
-		if PCloPants > 0:'You pull your pants down and show him your ass for a few seconds. Then you quickly cover up and take your money.'
-		if PCloSkirt > 0:'You lift your skirt up and show him your ass for a few seconds. Then you quickly cover up and take your money.'
+		if PCloPants > 0: 'You pull your pants down and show him your ass for a few seconds before quickly covering up and taking your money.'
+		if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You lift your skirt up and show him your ass for a few seconds before quickly covering up and taking your money.'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'Free':
 		if $ARGS[2] = 'Question':
-			if PCloPants > 0:'You pull your pants down and show him your ass for a few seconds. You give your ass a little shake for him before you cover up.'
-			if PCloSkirt > 0:'You lift your skirt up and show him your ass for a few seconds. You give your ass a little shake for him before you cover up.'
+			if PCloPants > 0: 'You pull your pants down and show him your ass for a few seconds. You give your ass a little shake for him before covering up.'
+			if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You lift your skirt up and show him your ass for a few seconds. You give your ass a little shake for him before covering up.'
 		elseif $ARGS[2] = 'Flash':
-			if PCloPants > 0:'You pull your pants down and expose your ass to the road for a few seconds. A couple cars pass by and honk in appreciation. You give your ass a little shake before you cover up.'
-			if PCloSkirt > 0:'You lift your skirt up and expose your ass to the road for a few seconds. A couple cars pass by and honk in appreciation. You give your ass a little shake before you cover up.'
+			if PCloPants > 0: 'You pull your pants down and expose your ass to the road for a few seconds. A few cars pass by and honk in appreciation as you give your ass a little shake before covering up.'
+			if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You lift your skirt up and expose your ass to the road for a few seconds. A few cars pass by and honk in appreciation as you give your ass a little shake before covering up.'
 		end
 	end
 	gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 5
@@ -312,13 +312,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'assFlash':
 	
 	!if (bimbolevel >= 1 or pcs_horny >= 10) and (PCloBimbo = 1 or PCloStyle = 4) and $ARGS[2] = 'Question':
 	if (bimbolevel >= 1 or pcs_horny >= 10) and (PCloBimbo = 1 or PCloStyle = 4) and $ARGS[2] = 'Question':
-		carwashscene = rand(1, 100)
+		carwashscene = rand(1,100)
 		if carwashscene <= min(max(50,slut_compare),75) and carwashscene >= 50:	
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'handQ'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'handQ'
 		elseif carwashscene <= min(max(75,slut_compare),100) and carwashscene >= 75:	
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowQ'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowQ'
 		else
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyQ'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyQ'
 		end
 	else
 		act 'Go back to the gas station': 
@@ -352,15 +352,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pussyFlash':
 	end
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'Paid':
-		if PCloPants > 0:'You pull your pants down and show him your pussy for a few seconds. Then you quickly cover up and take your money.'
-		if PCloSkirt > 0:'You lift your skirt up and show him your pussy for a few seconds. Then you quickly cover up and take your money.'
+		if PCloPants > 0: 'You pull your pants down and show him your pussy for a few seconds before quickly covering up and taking your money.'
+		if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You lift your skirt up and show him your pussy for a few seconds before quickly covering up and taking your money.'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'Free':
 		if $ARGS[2] = 'Question':
-			if PCloPants > 0:'You pull your pants down and show him your pussy for a few seconds. You rub your clit a little for him before you cover up.'
-			if PCloSkirt > 0:'You lift your skirt up and show him your pussy for a few seconds. You rub your clit a little for him before you cover up.'
+			if PCloPants > 0: 'You pull your pants down and show him your pussy for a few seconds. You rub your clit a little for him before you cover up.'
+			if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You lift your skirt up and show him your pussy for a few seconds. You rub your clit a little for him before you cover up.'
 		elseif $ARGS[2] = 'Flash':
-			if PCloPants > 0:'You pull your pants down and expose your pussy to the road for a few seconds. A couple cars pass by and honk in appreciation. You rub your clit a little before you cover up.'
-			if PCloSkirt > 0:'You lift your skirt up and expose your pussy to the road for a few seconds. A couple cars pass by and honk in appreciation. You rub your clit a little before you cover up.'
+			if PCloPants > 0: 'You pull your pants down and expose your pussy to the road for a few seconds. A few cars pass by and honk in appreciation as you rub your clit a little before covering up.'
+			if PCloSkirt > 0: 'You lift your skirt up and expose your pussy to the road for a few seconds. A few cars pass by and honk in appreciation as you rub your clit a little before covering up.'
 		end
 	end
 	gs 'arousal', 'flashlite', 5
@@ -368,11 +368,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pussyFlash':
 	
 	!if (bimbolevel >= 1 or pcs_horny >= 15) and (PCloBimbo = 1 or PCloStyle = 4) and $ARGS[2] = 'Question':
 	if (bimbolevel >= 1 or pcs_horny >= 15) and (PCloBimbo = 1 or PCloStyle = 4) and $ARGS[2] = 'Question':
-		carwashscene = rand(1, 100)
+		carwashscene = rand(1,100)
 		if carwashscene <= min(max(60,slut_compare),100) and carwashscene >= 60:	
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowQ'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowQ'
 		else
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'handQ'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'handQ'
 		end
 	else
 		act 'Go back to the gas station': 
@@ -403,14 +403,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'handjob':
 	gs 'stat'
 
 	if rand(1, 100) < 50:
-		i = rand(1, 2)
+		i = rand(1,2)
 		if i = 1:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/handjob/hand.jpg"></center>'
 		else
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/handjob/hj.jpg"></center>'
 		end
 	else
-		i = rand(0, 2)
+		i = rand(0,2)
 		if i = 0:
 			'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/handjob/hj<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 		else
@@ -419,18 +419,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'handjob':
 	end
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'Paid':
-		'You follow him behind the gas station, where you get the promised money, kneel down, unzip his pants and start working his shaft with your hands.'
+		'You follow him behind the gas station, where you get the promised money. You then kneel down, unzip his pants and start working his shaft with your hands.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'hj', 15, 'sub', 'prostitution', 'unknown'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'Free':
-		'You lead him behind the gas station, kneel down, unzip his pants and start working his shaft with your hands.'
+		'You lead him behind the gas station where you kneel down, unzip his pants and start working his shaft with your hands.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'hj', 15, 'dom', 'unknown'
 	end
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	'After a while, the man starts pulling your head closer and closer to him. He asks you to blow him: "I''ll give you 200 <b>₽</b> if you open that mouth for me.'
+	'After a while, the man starts pulling your head closer to him. "I''ll give you 200 <b>₽</b> if you open that mouth for me."'
 	
-	if (bimbolevel >= 1 and pcs_inhib >= 30) or pcs_horny >= 30:act 'Open your mouth for him':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjob', 'Paid', 'handjob'
-	act 'Rub harder to make him cum':gt 'zaprFWash', 'handjobEndQ'
+	if (bimbolevel >= 1 and pcs_inhib >= 30) or pcs_horny >= 30: act 'Give him a blowjob': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjob', 'Paid', 'handjob'
+	act 'Keep using your hand': gt 'zaprFWash', 'handjobEndQ'
 end
 
 ! $ARGS[1] = whether you got paid for this
@@ -455,7 +455,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob':
 	pcs_mood += 5
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(1, 100) < 50:
+	if rand(1,100) < 50:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/blowjob' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/blowjob' + rand(1,3) + '.mp4"></video></center>'
@@ -463,31 +463,31 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjob':
 	
 	if $ARGS[2] = 'Question': 
 		if $ARGS[1] = 'Paid':
-			'You follow him behind the gas station, where you get the promised money, kneel down, unzip his pants and start working his shaft with your mouth.'
+			'You follow him behind the gas station, where you get the promised money. You then kneel down, unzip his pants and take his dick into your mouth.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'sub', 'prostitution', 'unknown'
 		elseif $ARGS[1] = 'Free':
-			'You lead him behind the gas station, kneel down, unzip his pants and start working his shaft with your mouth.'
+			'You lead him behind the gas station where kneel down, unzip his pants and take his dick into your mouth.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'dom', 'unknown'
 		end
 	elseif $ARGS[2] = 'handjob':
 		if $ARGS[1] = 'Paid':
-			'You grab the money he tosses at you and switch to working his shaft with your mouth.'
+			'You grab the money he tosses at you before taking his dick into your mouth.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'sub', 'prostitution', 'unknown'
 		elseif $ARGS[1] = 'Free':
-			'You switch to working his shaft with your mouth.'
+			'You take his dick into your mouth.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'bj', 15, 'dom', 'unknown'
 		end
 	end
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	'After a while, the man starts trying to remove your clothes. He asks you to let him fuck your pussy: "I''ll give you 400 <b>₽</b> if you let me take your pussy! C''mon!'
+	'After a while, the man starts trying to remove your clothes. "I''ll give you 400 <b>₽</b> if you let me take your pussy."'
 	
 	if (bimbolevel >= 1 and pcs_inhib >= 40) or pcs_horny >= 40:
 		if stat['think_virgin'] = 1:
-			act 'Offer your ass instead (you don''t want to lose your virginity to this stranger...)':gt 'zaprFWash', 'fuckAnal', 'Paid'
+			act 'Offer your ass instead': gt 'zaprFWash', 'fuckAnal', 'Paid'
 		else
-			act 'Offer your pussy':gt 'zaprFWash', 'fuckPussy', 'Paid'
-			act 'Offer your ass':gt 'zaprFWash', 'fuckAnal', 'Paid'
+			act 'Offer your pussy': gt 'zaprFWash', 'fuckPussy', 'Paid'
+			act 'Offer your ass': gt 'zaprFWash', 'fuckAnal', 'Paid'
 		end
 	end
 	act 'Suck harder to make him cum':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndQ'
@@ -509,14 +509,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuckPussy':
 	pcs_mood += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(1, 100) < 50:
+	if rand(1,100) < 50:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/fuckpussy' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/fuckpussy' + rand(1,4) + '.mp4"></video></center>'
 	end
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'Paid':
-		'You bend over and let the man start fucking your pussy after collecting your money.'
+		'You take the money before bending over and letting the man fuck your pussy.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'prostitution', 'unknown'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'Free':
 		'You bend over and let the man start fucking your pussy.'
@@ -524,7 +524,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuckPussy':
 	end
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyEndQ'
+	act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'pussyEndQ'
 end
 
 ! $ARGS[1] = whether you got paid for this
@@ -543,7 +543,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuckAnal':
 	pcs_mood += 10
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(1, 100) < 50:
+	if rand(1,100) < 50:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/fuckanal' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/fuckanal' + rand(1,4) + '.mp4"></video></center>'
@@ -551,7 +551,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuckAnal':
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'auto_lube', 'anal'
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'Paid':
-		'You bend over and let the man start fucking your ass after you collect your money. His cock is still wet with your saliva as it slides inside you.'
+		'You take the money before bending over and letting the man fuck your ass. His cock is still wet with your saliva as it slides inside you.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'anal', 30, 'sub', 'prostitution', 'unknown'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'Free':
 		'You bend over and let the man start fucking your ass. His cock is still wet with your saliva as it slides inside you.'
@@ -559,34 +559,34 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'fuckAnal':
 	end
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	rapePussyChance = rand(1, 100)
+	rapePussyChance = rand(1,100)
 	if rapePussyChance <= min(max(1,slut_compare),20):
-		act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'rapePussy'
+		act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'rapePussy'
 	else
-		act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'analEndQ'
+		act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'analEndQ'
 	end
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'rapePussy':
-	i = rand(1, 5)
+	i = rand(1,5)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/hardanal<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
 	
-	'The man fucks your ass furiously, taking no heed of your painful moans. As you try to move away a bit to limit the depth he can reach in your ass, he slaps your buttcheeks hard and shouts:'
-	'"Stop moving bitch! Who do you think you are, that you can tell me what to do?"'
+	'The man fucks your ass furiously, taking no heed of your painful moans. As you try to move away to limit the depth he can reach in your ass, he slaps your ass hard.' 
+	'"Stop moving, bitch! Who do you think you are that you can tell me what to do?!" he shouts.'
 	
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
 		'He gropes your ass, lifts it up and suddenly spots your hymen.'
-		'"What, you are a virgin? Such a tease and still a virgin, really?"'
-		rapeAnyway = rand(1, 100)
+		'"Wait, you''re a virgin?! Such a tease and still a virgin!"'
+		rapeAnyway = rand(1,100)
 		if rapeAnyway <= min(max(1,slut_compare),50):
 			'"It would have happened sooner or later anyway, virgin slut. Now enjoy and remember this moment; I know I will!"'
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'rapePussyYes', 'virgin'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'rapePussyYes', 'virgin'
 		else
 			'"Girls like you should not be acting like this! Someone should have taught you a lesson a long time ago."'
-			act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishSpank'
+			act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishSpank'
 		end
 	else
-		act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'rapePussyYes', 'normal'
+		act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'rapePussyYes', 'normal'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -598,31 +598,31 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'rapePussyYes':
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'virgin':
 		pcs_mood -= 30
-		'He gropes your ass, lifts it up and pushes his dick inside your pussy in one thrust! You feel your hymen break and know your virginity is gone forever. What will your friends and family think of you now if they find out?'
+		'He gropes your ass, lifts it up and pushes his dick inside your pussy in one thrust. You feel your hymen break and know your virginity is now gone forever.'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'normal':
 		pcs_mood -= 20
-		'He gropes your ass, lifts it up and pushes his dick inside your pussy in one thrust, all the way to the hilt!'
+		'He gropes your ass, lifts it up and pushes his dick inside your pussy in one thrust, all the way to the hilt.'
 	end
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'prostitution', 'rough', 'rape', 'unknown'
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	act 'Continue':gt 'zaprFWash', 'vaginaCum', 'rape'
+	act 'Continue': gt 'zaprFWash', 'vaginaCum', 'rape'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'pussyEndQ':
-	'You can feel that the man is about to orgasm. You decide to...:'
+	'You can feel that the man is about to cum, so you decide to...'
 	
-	act 'Let him cum inside your vagina':gt 'zaprFWash', 'vaginaCum', 'consensual'
-	act 'Take his cum on your face':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndFace', 'inside'
-	act 'Let him cum inside your mouth':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouth', 'inside'
+	act 'Let him cum in your pussy': gt 'zaprFWash', 'vaginaCum', 'consensual'
+	act 'Let him cum on your face': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndFace', 'inside'
+	act 'Let him cum in your mouth': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouth', 'inside'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'analEndQ':
-	'You can feel that the man is about to ejaculate. You decide to...:'
+	'You can feel that the man is about to ejaculate, so you decide to...'
 	
-	act 'Let him cum inside your ass':gt 'zaprFWash', 'assCum'
-	act 'Take his cum on your face':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndFace', 'inside'
-	act 'Let him cum inside your mouth':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouth', 'inside'
+	act 'Let him cum in your ass': gt 'zaprFWash', 'assCum'
+	act 'Let him cum on your face': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndFace', 'inside'
+	act 'Let him cum in your mouth': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouth', 'inside'
 end
 
 ! $ARGS[1] = whether this was rape or not
@@ -637,16 +637,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'vaginaCum':
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'consensual':
 		pcs_mood += 20
-		'You let him cum deep inside your vagina. A pleasant warmth fills your insides as he shoots his load deep inside you. When he pulls out, a bit of sperm leaks out of your hole.'
+		'You let him cum in your pussy. A pleasant warmth fills your insides as he shoots his load deep inside you. When he pulls out, some of it leaks out of your hole.'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'rape':
 		pcs_mood -= 20
-		'The pounding suddenly stops as he cums deep inside your vagina. You can feel his cum inside of you as he continues to shoot his load inside you. When he pulls out, a bit of sperm leaks out of your hole.'
+		'The pounding suddenly stops as he cums inside you. You can feel his cum spurting into you and when he pulls out, some of it leaks out of your hole.'
 	end
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	act 'Go back to the gas station':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+	act 'Go back to the gas station': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'assCum':
@@ -659,20 +659,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'assCum':
 	gs 'stat'
 	
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/cumanal' + rand(1,2) + '.mp4"></video></center>'
-	
-	'You let him cum deep inside your ass. A pleasant warmth fills your insides as he shoots his load deep inside you. When he pulls out, a bit of sperm leaks out of your hole before you can tighten your worn out anus.'
-	
+	'You let him cum inside your ass. A pleasant warmth fills your insides as he shoots his load deep inside you. When he pulls out, some of it leaks out of you before you can tighten your worn out anus.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	act 'Go back to gas station':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+	act 'Go back to gas station': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'handjobEndQ':
-	'You can feel that the man is about to orgasm. You decide to take it...:'
+	'You can feel that the man is about to cum, so you decide to take it...'
 	
-	act 'On your face':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndFace', 'outside'
-	act 'On your hands':gt 'zaprFWash', 'handjobEndHands'
+	act 'On your face': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndFace', 'outside'
+	act 'On your hands': gt 'zaprFWash', 'handjobEndHands'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'handjobEndHands':	
@@ -681,25 +679,25 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'handjobEndHands':
 	gs 'cum_call', 'hands'
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(1, 100) < 30:
+	if rand(1,100) < 30:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/sex/cum/handjob/hand0,' + rand(0,1) + '.mp4"></video></center>'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/shared/sex/cum/handjob/hand' + rand(1,2) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 	
-	'When the man starts to ejaculate, you quickly point his cock away from your face. Your hands are covered in cum by the time he is done ejaculating. His sack was full, you can say that for sure.'
+	'When the man starts cumming, you quickly point his cock away from your face. Your hands are covered in cum by the time he''s done.'
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	act 'Go back to the gas station':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+	act 'Go back to the gas station': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjobEndQ':
-	'You can feel that the man is about to orgasm. You decide to take it...:'
+	'You can feel that the man is about to cum, so you decide to take it...'
 	
-	act 'On your face':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndFace', 'outside'
-	act 'In your mouth':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouth', 'outside'
+	act 'On your face': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndFace', 'outside'
+	act 'In your mouth': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouth', 'outside'
 end
 
 ! $ARGS[1] = whether his cock was inside or outside of you before he cums on your face
@@ -709,22 +707,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjobEndFace':
 	gs 'cum_call', 'face'
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(1, 100) < 30:
+	if rand(1,100) < 30:
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/cumface' + rand(1,2) + '.mp4"></video></center>'
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/cumface' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	end
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'outside':
-		'When the man starts to ejaculate, you quickly point his cock towards your face. Your face is covered in cum by the time he is done ejaculating. His sack was full, you can say that for sure.'
+		'When the man starts cumming, you quickly point his cock towards your face. Your face is covered in cum by the time he''s done.'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'inside':
-		'When the man starts to ejaculate, you quickly take his cock out of you and point it towards your face. Your face is covered in cum by the time he is done ejaculating. His sack was full, you can say that for sure.'
+		'When the man starts cumming, you quickly take his cock out of your mouth and point it towards your face. Your face is covered in cum by the time he''s done.'
 	end
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	act 'Go back to the gas station':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+	act 'Go back to the gas station': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 end
 
 ! $ARGS[1] = whether his cock was inside or outside of you before he cums in your mouth
@@ -732,24 +730,24 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjobEndMouth':
 	gs 'cum_call', 'mouth', $boy
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(1, 100) < 60:
+	if rand(1,100) < 60:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/cummouth' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/cummouth1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	end
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'outside':
-		'When the man starts to ejaculate, you quickly open your mouth while keeping his cock aimed straight at your tongue, giving him a good view of the cum as it flies inside your mouth. His sack was full, you can say that for sure.'
+		'When the man starts cumming, you quickly open your mouth while keeping his cock aimed at your tongue, giving him a good view of the cum as it flies inside your mouth.'
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'inside':
-		'When the man starts to ejaculate, you quickly take his cock out of you and aim it straight at your tongue, giving him a good view of the cum as it flies inside your mouth. His sack was full, you can say that for sure.'
+		'When the man starts cumming, you quickly take his cock out of your mouth and aim it at your tongue, giving him a good view of the cum as it flies inside your mouth.'
 	end
 	
 	*nl
-	'Your mouth is full of sperm. You decide to...:'
+	'Your mouth is full of cum. You decide to...'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
-	act 'Swallow and then show him your empty mouth':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouthSwallow'
-	act 'Spit it out in front of him':gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouthSpit'
+	act 'Swallow it': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouthSwallow'
+	act 'Spit it out': gt 'zaprFWash', 'blowjobEndMouthSpit'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjobEndMouthSwallow':
@@ -759,48 +757,43 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjobEndMouthSwallow':
 	gs 'stat'
 	
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/swallow' + rand(1,4) + '.jpg"></center>'
-	
-	'You gulp down the mouthful of sperm and then present your tongue as proof that all of his seed is now in your belly.'
-	'The man smiles, slaps you mildly on your face and says: "What a nice young slut you are. Next time I need a refill, I''ll be sure to stop by."'
-	
+	'You gulp down the mouthful of cum and present your tongue to him.'
+	'The man smiles and slaps you mildly on the face. "What a nice young slut you are. Next time I need a refill, I''ll be sure to stop by."'
 	stat['swallow'] += 1
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	act 'Go back to the gas station':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+	act 'Go back to the gas station': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'blowjobEndMouthSpit':
 	if pcs_inhib < 30: inhib_exp += rand(2,4)
 	gs 'stat'
 
-	if rand(1, 100) > 50:
+	if rand(1,100) > 50:
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/spit' + rand(1,3) + '.jpg"></center>'
 	else
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/spit1.mp4"></video></center>'
 	end
 	
-	'You spit the load of sperm down between the legs of your customer. He doesn''t seem happy about it...'
-	'His face darkens and he says: "What, my cum isn''t good enough for you to swallow? I''ll teach you bitch!"'
-	'He moves closer to you with an angry look!'
+	'You spit the cum out between the legs of your customer.'
+	'His face darkens. "What, my cum isn''t good enough for you to swallow? I''ll teach you, bitch!"'
+	'He moves closer to you with an angry scowl on his face...'
 	
-	act 'Run back to the gas station':gt 'zaprFWash', 'runback'
+	act 'Run back to the gas station': gt 'zaprFWash', 'runback'
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'runback':
-	minut += 5
 	! runSuccess uses a simpler version of the formula used with carwashscene
 	! just based on strength and agility; uses whichever is higher to try and run away
 	! min 25 percent chance; max 75 percent chance for this initial getaway
-	runSuccess = rand(1, 100)
+	runSuccess = rand(1,100)
 	if runSuccess <= min(max(25,pcs_stren,pcs_agil),75):
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/gadukino/village/turn_back.jpg"></center>'
-		
-		'You manage to escape his grasp! You take a quick look behind you to make sure he''s not following you before heading back to the gas station.'
-		
+		'You manage to escape his grasp and take a quick look behind you to make sure he''s not following you before heading back to the gas station.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
-		act 'Escape':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+		act 'Escape': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 	else
 		pain['cheeks'] += 2
 		pain['head'] += 2
@@ -808,21 +801,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'runback':
 		pain['neck'] += 4
 		
 		'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/punishbeatface.mp4"></video></center>'
-		
-		'You aren''t quick enough and he catches you. He pushes you down and starts to slap your face!'
-		
+		'You aren''t quick enough and he catches you. He pushes you down and starts to slap across the face.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
 		
-		act 'Endure his punishment':gt 'zaprFWash', 'punish'
+		act 'Endure his punishment': gt 'zaprFWash', 'punish'
 		! gave doms the choice to fight back as long as they have some energy related stat with something left even if they lost the roll for runSuccess
 		! these values are based off of the cheat menu values for players who turn off these stats as they can never go below 35
 		gs 'willpower', 'skill', 'resist', 'stren_lvl'
 		will_cost = (will_cost * 3) / 2
 		if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
-			act 'Push him off of you and escape (<<will_cost>> Willpower)': gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist' & gt 'zaprFWash', 'fight'
+			act 'Push him off and escape (<<will_cost>> Willpower)': gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist' & gt 'zaprFWash', 'fight'
 		else
-			act 'Push him off of you and escape (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
+			act 'Push him off and escape (<font color="red"><<will_cost>> Willpower</font>)': '<br><font color="red">You don''t have enough willpower to use this action.</font>'
 		end	
 	end
 end
@@ -846,7 +837,7 @@ end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'punish':
 	! once again punishType uses the same logic as carwashscene for dynamic choices
-	punishType = rand(1, 100)
+	punishType = rand(1,100)
 	if punishType <= min(max(50,slut_compare),75) and punishType >= 50:	
 		gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishAnal'
 	elseif punishType <= min(max(75,slut_compare),100) and punishType >= 75:	
@@ -864,10 +855,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punishSpank':
 	gs 'stat'
 	
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/punishspank.mp4"></video></center>'
-	
 	'The angry man drags you to a more secluded area, bends you over and starts to spank your ass very hard.'
-	'After twenty minutes of ruthless punishment, he finally stops, and you crawl away with your ass burning.'
-	
+	'After twenty minutes of ruthless punishment, he finally stops and you crawl away with your ass burning.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 15, 'sub', 'rough', 'unknown'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -882,13 +871,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punishAnal':
 	gs 'cum_call', 'anus'
 	gs 'stat'
 	
-	i = rand(1, 3)
+	i = rand(1,3)
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/punishanal<<i>>.mp4"></video></center>'
-	
-	'The angry man drags you to a more secluded area, bends you over, and sticks a finger in your ass.'
+	'The angry man drags you to a more secluded area, bends you over and sticks a finger in your ass.'
 	'Your anus fully exposed, he starts fucking it ruthlessly.'
-	'After half an hour of rough assfucking he releases his grip on you so you can finally crawl away, your aching ass sore from the brutal penetration.'
-	
+	'After half an hour of rough assfucking, he releases his grip on you so you can finally crawl away, your aching ass sore from the brutal penetration.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'anal', 30, 'sub', 'rough', 'rape', 'unknown'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -896,28 +883,28 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punishAnal':
 end
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'punishPussyQ':
-	'The angry man drags you to a more secluded area. He bends you over and starts to rub your pussy.'
+	'The angry man drags you to a more secluded area where he bends you over and starts rubbing your pussy.'
 	
 	if pcs_vag = 0:
-		'Suddenly he remarks: "What? You''re a virgin? Such a slutty tease and still a virgin?'
+		'"Wait, you''re a virgin?! Such a slutty tease and you''re still a virgin?"'
 		
-		penetrate = rand (1, 100)
+		penetrate = rand (1,100)
 		if penetrate <= min(max(50,slut_compare),75) and penetrate >= 50:	
-			'I''ll spare your virginity but you''ll get fucked anyway. Sluts have more than one hole for a reason, right?'
+			'"I''ll spare your virginity, but you''re still getting fucked. Sluts have more than one hole for a reason, right?"'
 			
-			act 'Endure':gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishAnal'
+			act 'Endure it': gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishAnal'
 		elseif penetrate <= min(max(75,slut_compare),100) and penetrate >= 75:	
-			'This makes it even better! I''ll enjoy your tears even more! I haven''t had a virgin in forever!'
+			'"This makes it even better! I haven''t had a virgin in forever! I''m going to enjoy your tears, slut."'
 			
-			act 'Endure':gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishPussy', 'virgin'
+			act 'Endure it': gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishPussy', 'virgin'
 		else
-			'Someone should have done this a long time ago, but I''ll spare you penetration this time!'
+			'"Someone should have done this a long time ago, but I''ll spare you penetration this time!"'
 			
-			act 'Endure':gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishSpank'
+			act 'Endure it': gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishSpank'
 		end
 	else
-		'Let''s try what you''ve been teasing, you ungrateful whore!'
-		act 'Endure':gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishPussy', 'normal'
+		'"Let''s try what you''ve been teasing, you ungrateful whore!"'
+		act 'Endure it': gt 'zaprFWash', 'punishPussy', 'normal'
 	end
 end
 
@@ -932,13 +919,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'punishPussy':
 	'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/locations/shared/carwash/sex/punishpussy' + rand(1,5) + '.mp4"></video></center>'
 	
 	if $ARGS[1] = 'virgin':
-		'Your pussy fully exposed, he slowly inserts his cock inside of you. He pushes right up against your hymen, savoring the moment. Suddenly, you feel your hymen break and know your virginity is gone forever. What will your friends and family think of you now if they find out?'
+		'Your pussy fully exposed, he slowly inserts his cock inside you. He pushes right up against your hymen, savoring the moment. Suddenly, you feel your hymen break and know your virginity is now gone forever.'
 		pcs_mood -= 40
 	elseif $ARGS[1] = 'normal':
-		'Your pussy fully exposed, he starts fucking it ruthlessly.'
+		'Your pussy fully exposed, he starts ruthlessly fucking it.'
 		pcs_mood -= 20
 	end
-	'After half an hour of destroying your cunt, he releases his grip on you so you can finally crawl away, your aching pussy sore from the brutal penetration.'
+	'After half an hour, he releases his grip on you so you can finally crawl away, your aching pussy sore from the brutal penetration.'
 	
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 30, 'sub', 'rough', 'rape', 'unknown'
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -951,14 +938,14 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'punishEnd':
 	abductionChance = min(max(1,slut_compare),180)/2
 	if abductionChance >= rand(1,100):
-		'But your perpetrator isn''t done with you.'
+		'Your perpetrator isn''t done with you, however.'
 		'He catches you again, drags you to his car and pushes you into the trunk...'
-		'You have a feeling this probably will not go well for you...'
-		act 'Cry for help':gt 'abduction', 'start'
+		'You have a feeling this won''t go well for you...'
+		act 'Cry for help': gt 'abduction', 'start'
 	else		
 		'Your perpetrator stands up and just watches as you crawl away in pain.'
 		'He turns around and calmly walks away, leaving you alone.'
-		act 'Escape':gt 'zaprF', 'start'
+		act 'Escape': gt 'zaprF', 'start'
 	end
 end