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+ 2 - 3
locations/albina_house_events.qsrc

@@ -221,8 +221,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'swim_winter1':
 
 		
 		act 'Do something else while she''s in the tub':
-			!! ??????
-			'You wait ....'
+			'You decide not to join her in the tub and sit in one of the chairs near the pool and play with your phone until Albina climbs out and wraps herself in a towel before motioning for you to follow her.'
 			minut +=6
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Continue':gt 'albinahome', 'bedroom'
@@ -311,7 +310,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'after_swim_shower1':
 			act'Shower':
 				cla & *clr
 				'<center><video autoplay loop src="images/shared/home/bathroom/dush.mp4"></center>'
-				'A lot of expensive looking stuff litters the shelves, but limit yourself to using only what you need.'
+				'A lot of expensive looking stuff litters the shelves, but you limit yourself to using only what you need.'
 				*nl
 				dynamic $showerdin
 				*nl

+ 20 - 11
locations/albina_lazar_sex.qsrc

@@ -78,33 +78,38 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'peek':
 	menu_off = 1
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz1.jpg"></center>'				
-	'You glance around to make sure nobody is nearby, then crack the door open slightly to peek in. You can see Albina in her underwear, squatting in front of Lazar. She pulls his jeans down and his impressively sized and rock hard dick springs free. She starts licking and jerking it before she takes it into her mouth and down her throat, gagging as she deepthroats him as far as she can before pulling her head back up. She then starts bobbing her head up and down his shaft as she sucks his dick, occasionally taking him back down her throat and making him moan in pleasure as he grabs her head and holds her down as long as possible.'
+	'You glance around to make sure nobody is nearby, then crack the door open slightly to peek in. You can see Albina in her underwear, squatting in front of Lazar. She pulls his jeans down and his impressively sized and rock hard dick springs free.' 
+	'She starts licking and jerking it before she takes it into her mouth and down her throat, gagging as she deepthroats him as far as she can before pulling her head back up. She then starts bobbing her head up and down his shaft as she sucks his dick, occasionally taking him back down her throat and making him moan in pleasure as he grabs her head and holds her down as long as possible.'
 	gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 	gs 'stat'
 	act 'Keep watching':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz2.jpg"></center>'
-		'You keep watching as she pulls his dick out of her mouth with a loud pop, ropes of her saliva covering his shaft as she gasps for air. She stands up and wiggles out of her thong as Lazar takes the rest of his clothes off. She then pushes him down onto the bed and straddles his face so they are 69ing each other. You push the door open just a little more so you can see all the action. Lazar starts eagerly lapping away at her pussy as she continues to suck and deepthroat his dick.'
+		'You keep watching as she pulls his dick out of her mouth with a loud pop, ropes of her saliva covering his shaft as she gasps for air. She stands up and wiggles out of her thong as Lazar takes the rest of his clothes off. She then pushes him down onto the bed and straddles his face so they are 69ing each other. You push the door open just a little more so you can see all the action.' 
+		'Lazar starts eagerly lapping away at her pussy as she continues to suck and deepthroat his dick.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'voyeur', 5
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Keep watching':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz3.jpg"></center>'
 			'"I want you to ride me." he says as he slaps her ass hard.'
-			'You see a glimpse of an aroused smile on her face before she slides herself down. She teases him by grinding her wet pussy over his shaft before she grabs his dick and slowly lowers herself down onto it, moaning softly as it slides into her pussy. She leans back onto her hands and starts riding him reverse cowgirl style, slowly picking up speed and fucking him harder and faster before she falls forwards onto her hands and he grabs her hips, slamming her up and down on his dick. After a few minutes of this, she stops and turns around, swinging her leg over him and riding him cowgirl style, letting him play with her tits.'
+			'You see a glimpse of an aroused smile on her face before she slides herself down. She teases him by grinding her wet pussy over his shaft before she grabs his dick and slowly lowers herself down onto it, moaning softly as it slides into her pussy. She leans back onto her hands and starts riding him reverse cowgirl style, slowly picking up speed and fucking him harder and faster before she falls forwards onto her hands and he grabs her hips, slamming her up and down on his dick.' 
+			'After a few minutes of this, she stops and turns around, swinging her leg over him and riding him cowgirl style, letting him play with her tits as she rides him even harder.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 			gs 'stat'
 			act 'Keep watching':
 				*clr & cla
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz4.jpg"></center>'
-				'He takes her by surprise when he grabs her by the hips and rolls her over onto her back, making her giggle. He then starts fucking her missionary style, causing her to moan loudly as she wraps her legs tightly around his back. He starts fucking her harder as a result and she wraps her arms around his neck, pulling him down and making out with him as he keeps thrusting in and out of her ever wetter hole. After a few minutes, they stop and she whispers something in his ear, which makes her giggle and gets him to pull out of her and wait. She leans over and opens her nightstand, pulling out a bottle of lube and motioning for him to stand at the edge of the bed.'
+				'He takes her by surprise when he grabs her by the hips and rolls her over onto her back, making her giggle. He then starts fucking her missionary style, causing her to moan loudly as she wraps her legs tightly around his back. He starts fucking her harder as a result and she wraps her arms around his neck, pulling him down and making out with him as he keeps thrusting in and out of her ever wetter hole.' 
+				'After a few minutes, they stop and she whispers something in his ear, which makes her giggle and gets him to pull out of her and wait. She leans over and opens her nightstand, pulling out a bottle of lube and motioning for him to stand at the edge of the bed.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Keep watching':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/alblaz5.jpg"></center>'			
-					'You keep watching as she sits up on her knees and opens the bottle, squirts a plentiful amount of its contents onto her fingers and starts rubbing it into her asshole. The soft moan and look of bliss on her face tells you that she is fingering herself, preparing herself for the ass fucking she''s about to receive. When she feels she is ready, she passes the bottle to him and backs up to him on her hands and knees. Lazar lubes his shaft up and throws the bottle aside before he gives her ass a few hard smacks. He then moves in behind her and pushes his dick gently into her ass, which elicits a soft moan from her as a look of pleasure washes over her face.'
-                    'He is fairly slow and doesn''t go too deep at first, but once she starts moaning loudly and begging him to go faster, he starts fucking her backdoor a lot harder, slamming himself balls deep into her asshole. She grips the sheets tightly as her body is rocked by a massive orgasm. She falls forward and buries her face in the sheets, partially muffling her cries of pleasure. You quickly glance around to make sure nobody heard that.'
+					'You keep watching as she sits up on her knees and opens the bottle, squirts a plentiful amount of its contents onto her fingers and starts rubbing it into her asshole. The soft moan and look of bliss on her face tells you that she is fingering herself, preparing herself for the ass fucking she''s about to receive. When she feels she is ready, she passes the bottle to him and backs up to him on her hands and knees. Lazar lubes his shaft up and throws the bottle aside before he gives her ass a few hard smacks.' 
+					'He then moves in behind her and pushes his dick gently into her ass, which elicits a soft moan from her as a look of pleasure washes over her face. He is fairly slow and doesn''t go too deep at first, but once she starts moaning loudly and begging him to go faster, he starts fucking her backdoor a lot harder, slamming himself balls deep into her asshole. She grips the sheets tightly as her body is rocked by a massive orgasm. She falls forward and buries her face in the sheets, partially muffling her cries of pleasure.' 
+					'You quickly glance around to make sure nobody heard that.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Keep watching':
@@ -145,7 +150,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'join':
 	'It''s too much for you. You have to be part of this, so you walk in and close the door. You manage to walk all the way over to the bed before Lazar finally notices you, his dick loudly popping out of Albina''s mouth as he stumbles back a little in surprise. A puzzled Albina looks up at him, and then at you. "What the fuck <<$pcs_nickname>>? Can''t you knock?" she asks in a somewhat confused tone.'
 	if AlbinaQW['Lazar_Threesome'] = 1:
 		'"You guys looked like you were having fun, so I thought I could join in as well?"'
-		'Lazar just grins widely. "Getting to fuck you two babes at the same time again? Fuck yeah, I''m down with that!" and Albina just shakes her head in amusement. "Whatever. As long as you make me cum."'
+		'Lazar just grins widely. "Getting to fuck you two babes at the same time again? Fuck yeah, I''m down with that!" and Albina smiles in return. "If it''s anything like our last threesome, then I look forward to both of you making me cum again."'
 	else
 		'"You guys looked like you were having fun, so I thought I could join in as well?"'
 		'Lazar just grins widely. "Getting to fuck you two babes at the same time? Fuck yeah, I''m down for that. How about you?" he asks as he looks down at Albina, who just shrugs in indifference. "Whatever. As long as you make me cum."'
@@ -153,7 +158,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'join':
 	act 'Suck his cock':
 		*clr & cla
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/laz3some1.jpg"></center>'
-		'You strip naked as Albina resumes sucking his dick. Once you come over to join them, she pulls his dick out of her mouth and offers it to you. You take it into your mouth and start sucking it while she strokes it with her hand and sucks his balls. You swap his cock back and forth between each other before she stops and pushes you onto the bed. She bends over and buries her head into your crotch as Lazar moves in behind her and slides his dick back into her pussy. He starts fucking her as she licks and sucks on your clit, her moans adding to the pleasure.'
+		'You strip naked as Albina resumes sucking his dick. Once you come over to join them, she pulls his dick out of her mouth and offers it to you. You take it into your mouth and start sucking it while she strokes it with her hand and sucks his balls.' 
+		'You swap his cock back and forth between each other before she stops and pushes you onto the bed. She bends over and buries her head into your crotch as Lazar moves in behind her and slides his dick back into her pussy. He starts fucking her as she licks and sucks on your clit, her moans adding to the pleasure.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'group'
 		gs 'stat'
 		act 'Get eaten out':
@@ -172,13 +178,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'join':
 				act 'Join in sucking his dick':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/laz3some1.jpg"></center>'
-					'You don''t know how long he fucks you, but it feels amazing none the less. He eventually pulls out and Albina climbs off of you. You crawl over to the edge of the bed with her and take turns sucking his dick before Albina stops and motions for Lazar to lie back on the bed. As he does, she runs her hand over her asshole and finds that the lube has somewhat dried up, so she grabs the bottle, squirts a plentiful amount onto her fingers and rubs it into her asshole before fingering herself. She then squirts some lube onto Lazar''s dick and strokes it up and down his shaft which, combined with your pussy juices, gets him nice and slick.' 
+					'You don''t know how long he fucks you, but it feels amazing none the less. He eventually pulls out and Albina climbs off of you. You crawl over to the edge of the bed with her and take turns sucking his dick before Albina stops and motions for Lazar to lie back on the bed.' 
+					'As he does, she runs her hand over her asshole and finds that the lube has somewhat dried up, so she grabs the bottle, squirts a plentiful amount onto her fingers and rubs it into her asshole before fingering herself. She then squirts some lube onto Lazar''s dick and strokes it up and down his shaft which, combined with your pussy juices, gets him nice and slick.' 
 					gs 'arousal', 'bj', 5, 'group'
 					gs 'stat'
 					act 'Watch Albina get fucked':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/albina/sex/lazar/laz3some4.jpg"></center>'
-						'All lubed up, she squats above him reverse cowgirl style and guides the tip of his dick to her asshole. She relaxes and slowly slides down, moaning softly as his dick easily penetrates her backdoor. Once he''s inside her, she starts riding him, her ass slapping off his hips as she picks up speed. Lazar then grabs her knees and pulls her legs back before he really starts hammering her ass, causing her eyes to roll back in her head in pleasure. After a few minutes of this, he pulls out of her, leaving her looking a little disappointed. "Okay, your turn <<$pcs_nickname>>." he says as he reaches over and gives your ass a firm squeeze.'
+						'All lubed up, she squats above him reverse cowgirl style and guides the tip of his dick to her asshole. She relaxes and slowly slides down, moaning softly as his dick easily penetrates her backdoor. Once he''s inside her, she starts riding him, her ass slapping off his hips as she picks up speed. Lazar then grabs her knees and pulls her legs back before he really starts hammering her ass, causing her eyes to roll back in her head in pleasure.' 
+						'After a few minutes of this, he pulls out of her, leaving her looking a little disappointed. "Okay, your turn <<$pcs_nickname>>." he says as he reaches over and gives your ass a firm squeeze.'
 						gs 'arousal', 'voyeur_sex', 5, 'group'
 						gs 'stat'
 						act 'No anal':
@@ -230,7 +238,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'join':
 								act 'Climax':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><video autoplay loop  src="images/locations/city/redlight/studio_porn/sex/mff4.mp4"></center>'
-									'He starts really going at it before he grunts and moans in pleasure as you feel his warm cum coating your insides. You moan at the sensation as he continues pumping into your back door. When he finishes, he spreads your ass and pulls out. You squeeze and feel a stream of thick cum pour out of your ass and start running down the inside of your leg. Albina, having recovered from her orgasm, suddenly crawls in behind you and runs her tongue up the length of your thigh, licking up the sticky liquid on your leg before she stops underneath your ass and lets the rest of the cum flow into her mouth. When the stream finally stops, you turn around and watch Albina swallow before sticking her tongue out and showing you both that she''s gulped down all of the load. Lazar then collapses back on the bed, satisfied, and you and Albina crawl over and join him. You all bask in the afterglow of your threesome.' 
+									'He starts really going at it before he grunts and moans in pleasure as you feel his warm cum coating your insides. You moan at the sensation as he continues pumping into your back door. When he finishes, he spreads your ass and pulls out. You squeeze and feel a stream of thick cum pour out of your ass and start running down the inside of your leg. Albina, having recovered from her orgasm, suddenly crawls in behind you and runs her tongue up the length of your thigh, licking up the sticky liquid on your leg before she stops underneath your ass and lets the rest of the cum flow into her mouth.' 
+									'When the stream finally stops, you turn around and watch Albina swallow before sticking her tongue out and showing you both that she''s gulped down all of the load. Lazar then collapses back on the bed, satisfied, and you and Albina crawl over and join him. You all bask in the afterglow of your threesome.' 
 									gs 'arousal', 'anal', 5, 'group'
 									gs 'cum_call', 'anus', '$boy', 1
 									gs 'stat'

+ 6 - 4
locations/albina_mother_events.qsrc

@@ -132,7 +132,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Sunbathing with Albina':
 				'"No thanks. But I wouldn''t mind talking while you do."'
 				'"Suit yourself," she shrugs. Albina heads into her personal bathroom, leaving the door open for you to follow her in. You sit down on the edge of her bath while she steps into the shower.'
 				'"So you and your mother sunbathe together?"'
-				'"When we can," her voice echos back off the glass and tile. "Sometimes I''m busy, sometimes she''s busy. I wish she''d let me go full nude to avoid pantylines, but topless is the most she lets me get away with. Says I shouldn''t be worrying about those kinds of tanlines anyways."'
+				'"When we can," her voice echos back off the glass and tile. "Sometimes I''m busy, sometimes she''s busy. I wish she''d let me go full nude to avoid pantylines, but topless is the most she lets me get away with. Says I shouldn''t be worrying about those kinds of tanlines anyways. It doesn''t stop me swimming naked when she''s not home though." she adds with a small laugh.'
 				if motherKnowWhore > 0:
 					'"Pff. Better than my mother. Ever since she found out I''ve been having sex, she doesn''t even call me by my name anymore. Usually just ''whore'' or ''slut''. It fucking blows."'
 					'The tap squeaks off and Albina steps out of the shower, grabbing a towel to dry herself off.'
@@ -356,8 +356,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Peeping 2':
 				'Before you can watch any further, you hear someone coming and run over to the bathroom, pretending to leave just as the maid walks up the stairs doing her rounds. She seems a little surprised to see you.
 				"Are you okay, Miss <<$pcs_firstname>>?" she asks, noticing the flushed appearance on your face.
 				"Oh, uuhh... I was... just leaving the bathroom." you reply, awkwardly trying to hide the fact that you were peeping on her employer.
-				You awkwardly laugh and she seems even more confused. "No! I''m just... I''m fine. I promise."
-				The maid gives you an awkward stare, but Zoya walks out into the hallway before she can push you further. "Is everything okay out here Milena?" The maid silently nods and continues on her duties, giving you a disapproving glare as she enters Zoya''s bedroom. You avoid eye contact with Zoya as you hastily walk past her and return to Albina.'
+				You awkwardly laugh and she seems even more confused. "I''m just... I''m fine. I promise."
+				The maid gives you an awkward stare, but Zoya walks out into the hallway before she can push you further.' 
+				'"Is everything okay out here Milena?" The maid silently nods and continues on her duties, giving you a disapproving glare as she enters Zoya''s bedroom. You avoid eye contact with Zoya as you hastily walk past her and return to Albina.'
 			else
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/albinahome/zoyapeeping1.jpg"></center>'
 				'Before you can watch any further, you hear someone coming and run over to the bathroom, pretending to leave just as Albina arrives. She has an inquisitive look on her face.
@@ -365,7 +366,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'Peeping 2':
 				"Oh, uuhh... I was... just leaving the bathroom." you reply, awkwardly trying to hide the fact that you were peeping on her mother.
 				Albina raises a brow. "You didn''t clog the toilet did you?"
 				You awkwardly laugh and she seems even more confused. "No! I''m just... I''m fine. I promise."
-				Albina gives you an awkward glare, but her mother walks out into the hallway before she can push you further. "Everything okay girls?" Albina silently nods and motions for you to follow her. You avoid eye contact with Zoya as you walk past her.'
+				Albina gives you an awkward glare, but her mother walks out into the hallway before she can push you further.
+				"Is everything out here okay girls?" Albina silently nods and motions for you to follow her. You avoid eye contact with Zoya as you walk past her.'
 			end
 			
 			gs 'stat'

+ 7 - 6
locations/albinahome.qsrc

@@ -7,13 +7,13 @@
 if $ARGS[0] = 'gate':
 	act 'Leave':gt 'pav_residential'
 	
-    if hour  = 23 or hour < 7:
-		'Do not dare to ring insuch ungodly hour'
+    if hour = 23 or hour < 7:
+		'Now isn''t a good time for a house call.'
 	elseif hour < 9:
 		'You push a button on the intercom and a female voice blasts through. "What kind of ungodly hour do you call this?! Come back later for a social call!" That must have been her mother.'	
 	elseif hour <17:
 		if (kanikuli = 0) and (week < 6):
-			'Nobody answers your call'
+			'Nobody answers when you buzz the intercom a few times and so you decide to leave.'
 		else
 			gt 'albinahome', 'mom answers'
 		end
@@ -88,7 +88,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hallway':
 			if week = 3 or week = 6:
 				!! maid greeting sveta at front door
 				'The maid answers the door with a polite smile.'
-				'"Miss Albina is in her room and said you should meet her there." she syas before motioning for you to enter and closes the door behind you before returning to her duties.'
+				'"Miss Albina is in her room and said you should meet her there." she says before motioning for you to enter and closing the door behind you before returning to her duties.'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'albinahome', 'bedroom'
 			else
 				temp = rand(1, 2)
@@ -109,13 +109,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hallway':
 		!! For leaving the house or going to the bathroom, no random event chances
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/albinahome/hallway.jpg"></center>'
 		'The foyer is well appointed with hardwood flooring, numerous arches and tasteful decor. Lighting is sunk into the exquisite staircase that features wraparound balconies on either side.'
+		'You have been asked not to wander around the house alone, so you''re limited in where you can go.'
 		act 'Go back to town':
 			AlbinaQW['visiting'] = 0
 			minut += 3
 			gt 'pav_residential'
 		end
-		act 'Bathroom':gt 'albinahome', 'bathroom'
-		act 'Albina''s bedroom':gt 'albinahome', 'bedroom'
+		act 'Go to the bathroom':gt 'albinahome', 'bathroom'
+		act 'Go to Albina''s bedroom':gt 'albinahome', 'bedroom'
 	end
 end
 

+ 86 - 88
locations/city_apt_building.qsrc

@@ -16,13 +16,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'housemates':
 	minut +=1
 	gs 'stat'
 	 '<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/housemates.jpg"></center>'
-	'Floor 1 - You don''t know anyone on this floor'
-	'Floor 2 - You don''t know anyone on this floor'
-	'Floor 3 - You don''t know anyone on this floor'
+	'Floor 1 - You don''t know anyone on this floor.'
+	'Floor 2 - You don''t know anyone on this floor.'
+	'Floor 3 - You don''t know anyone on this floor.'
 	if trychat >= 1:
 		'Floor 4 - Apartment number 37: Tryndin Maximovich'
 	else
-		'Floor 4 - You don''t know anyone on this floor'
+		'Floor 4 - You don''t know anyone on this floor.'
 	end
 	'Floor 5 - Apartment number 49: Your apartment'
 	act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_1'
@@ -37,7 +37,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_1':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Ground floor of the apartment building</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs1.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>When you enter the building there is a short staircase down to the basement maintenance area and a short staircase up to the first floor, where there is a <a href="exec: gt ''city_apt_building'', ''housemates''">list</a> of the people who live here on the wall. A series of mail boxes for each apartment, two halls going off to each wing of the building, and more stairs going up. The area is fairly clean and well maintained.</center>'
+	'<center>When you enter the building there is a short staircase down to the basement maintenance area and a short staircase up to the first floor, where there is a <a href="exec: gt ''city_apt_building'', ''housemates''">list</a> of the people who live here on the wall. There is a series of mailboxes for each apartment, two halls going off to each wing of the building, and more stairs going up. The area is fairly clean and well maintained.</center>'
 	if rand(0,5) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor1_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor1_event_time):
 		floor1_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor1_events', '<<$ARGS[1]>>'
@@ -56,7 +56,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_2':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center>2nd floor of the apartment building</center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/stairs2.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>The second floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. Occasionally there is a flickering light or even a light out, sometimes they are not fixed for a couple of weeks.</center>'
+	'<center>The second floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. There is the occasional flickering light or even a light out, which are often not fixed for weeks.</center>'
 	if rand(0,3) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor2_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor2_event_time):
 		floor2_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor2_events'
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_3':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center>3rd floor of the apartment building</center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/stairs3.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>The third floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. Occasionally there is a flickering light or even a light out, sometimes they are not fixed for a couple of weeks.</center>'
+	'<center>The third floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. There is the occasional flickering light or even a light out, which are often not fixed for weeks.</center>'
 	if rand(0,3) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor3_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor3_event_time):
 		floor3_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor3_events', '<<$ARGS[1]>>'
@@ -94,7 +94,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor_4':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center>4th floor of the apartment building</center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/stairs3.jpg"></center>'
-	'<center>The fourth floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. Occasionally there is a flickering light or even a light out, sometimes they are not fixed for a couple of weeks.</center>'
+	'<center>The fourth floor stairwell is decently clean and fairly well maintained. There is the occasional flickering light or even a light out, which are often not fixed for weeks.</center>'
 	if rand(0,3) = 0 and ((minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24) - floor4_event_time) > 60) or ((daystart+1)*1440 < floor4_event_time):
 		floor4_event_time = minut + 60*(hour+daystart*24)
 		gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor4_events'
@@ -149,7 +149,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roof':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/roof/roofn.jpg"></center>'
 		end
 	end
-	'<center>The roof is fairly flat, with the roof access door in a raised part in the middle of the roof. Along one of the walls is another door to some type of storage or maintenance access. There are several ventilation stacks on the roof as well.</center>'
+	'<center>The roof is fairly flat, with the roof access door in a raised part in the middle of the roof. Along one of the walls is another door to some type of storage or maintenance area. There are several ventilation stacks on the roof as well.</center>'
 
 	act 'Go down to the fifth floor':
 		if PCloswimwear = 1 or $clothingworntype = 'nude':
@@ -186,11 +186,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roof':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/residential/apartment/roof/nude.jpg"></center>'
 				if krem = 0:
 					pcs_tan += 1
-					'You strip out of your clothes until you are naked, then you lie down to sunbathe.'
+					'You strip out of your clothes until you are naked, then lie down to sunbathe.'
 				elseif krem > 0:
 					krem -= 1
 					pcs_tan += 3
-					'You strip out of your clothes until you are naked, then you put the sunblock on your body and lie down on the roof to sunbathe.'
+					'You strip out of your clothes until you are naked, then put sunblock on your body and lie down on the roof to sunbathe.'
 				end
 				act 'Get Up':gt 'city_apt_building', 'roof'
 			end
@@ -212,7 +212,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'roof':
 				elseif krem > 0:
 					krem -= 1
 					pcs_tan += 3
-					'You put the sunblock on your body and lie down on the roof to sunbathe.'
+					'You put sunblock on your body and lie down on the roof to sunbathe.'
 				end
 				act 'Get Up':gt 'city_apt_building', 'roof'
 			end
@@ -234,39 +234,39 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lift':
 		minut +=1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/elevator1.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you are surprised to see a middle-aged naked woman handcuffed to the lift railing. She looks at you in panic, you''re too baffled to do anything until she says. "Can you please push floor three?"'
-		'You nod, reach in and push the button to go up to floor three. Then the doors close, and the elevator moves away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you are surprised to see a middle-aged naked woman handcuffed to the lift railing. She looks at you in panic, but you''re too baffled to do anything until she says "Can you please push floor three?"'
+		'You nod, reach in and push the button to go up to floor three. The doors close and the elevator moves away from you.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
 	elseif res_lift_ev <=10:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut +=1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/elevator2.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see a woman dressed in lingerie standing in it, her tits hanging out of her bra and a coat pulled back to show off her body! At first her eyes are closed, but when she opens them, a moment after the doors open, she looks at you in panic and begins frantically pressing all of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see a woman dressed in lingerie standing inside, her tits hanging out of her bra with her coat pulled back to show off her body! At first her eyes are closed, but when she opens them, she looks at you in panic and begins frantically pressing all of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
 	elseif res_lift_ev <=15:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut +=1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/elevator3_'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see a naked woman standing in it! She looks at you in panic and begins frantically pressing all of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see a naked woman standing in it. She looks at you in panic and begins frantically pressing all of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
 	elseif res_lift_ev <=20:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut +=1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/elevator4_'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see a young man standing it with his limp dick hanging out! He has a big smile on his face.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see a young man standing it with his limp dick hanging out! He has a huge smile on his face.'
 		if hotcat >= 6:
-			'He looks you over and his smile turns into a grin, obviusly liking what he sees. "Get in here and go down, so I can go up." He then laughs at his own joke.'
-			'You''re too baffled to do anything, you stand there just staring at him. Then he speaks up again. "Come on, don''t be shy, get that hot little body over here and wrap those beautiful lips around my cock."'
-			'When you still don''t move he frowns and pushes one of the buttons. "Whatever!" You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+			'He looks you over and his smile turns into a grin, obviously liking what he sees. "Get in here and go down, so I can go up." He then laughs at his own joke.'
+			'You''re too baffled to do anything and just stand there staring at him before he speaks up. "Come on, don''t be shy! Get that tight little body over here and wrap those beautiful lips around my cock."'
+			'When you still don''t move, he frowns and pushes one of the buttons. "Whatever!" You stand there as the door closes and the elevator moves away from you.'
 		elseif hotcat >= 4:
 			'He looks you over. "You''ll do. Get in here and go down, so I can go up." He then laughs at his own joke.'
-			'You''re too baffled to do anything, you stand there just staring at him. Then he speaks up again. "Well come on, it isn''t going to suck itself."'
-			'When you still don''t move he frowns and pushes one of the buttons. "Whatever, a fugly chick like you should be thankful I even offered!" You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+			'You''re too baffled to do anything and just stand there staring at him before he speaks up. "Well come on, it isn''t going to suck itself."'
+			'When you still don''t move, he frowns and pushes one of the buttons. "Whatever, a fugly chick like you should be thankful I even offered!" You just stand there as the door closes and the elevator moves away from you.'
 		else
-			'His smile fades as he looks you over and gives you a slightly disgusted look. "Oh it''s you... I was hoping for a hot bitch." Then reaches over to push one of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled and insulted to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+			'His smile fades as he looks you over and gives you a slightly disgusted look. "Oh it''s you... I was hoping for a hot bitch." he whines before reaching over to push one of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled and insulted to do anything as the door closes and the elevator moves away from you.'
 		end
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
 	elseif res_lift_ev <=25:
@@ -274,18 +274,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lift':
 		minut +=1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/elevator5.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see a woman standing in it. She looks at you and smiles, then pulls her top down exposing her tits, followed by pulling up her skirt and showing off her neatly trimmed pussy! She then reaches across and pushes one of the buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see a woman standing in it. She looks at you and smiles, then pulls her top down to expose her tits, followed by pulling up her skirt and showing off her neatly trimmed pussy. She then reaches across and pushes one of the buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
 	elseif res_lift_ev <=30:
 		*clr & cla
 		minut +=1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/elevator6.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see the couple from your floor, you have seen them around the building before. Right now they are making out in the lift, his shirt is off and laying on the floor, one of her legs is being held up by him. They look on the verge of having sex right there in the lift.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see the couple from your floor inside. You''ve seen them around the building before. They are partially undressed and making out, seemingly looking like they''re about to have sex.'
 		if hotcat >= 6:
-			'She looks at you and gives a inviting smile, then makes a come her motion with her hand. "You can join us if you want."'
+			'She looks at you and gives you an inviting smile, then motions at you with her hand. "You can join us if you want."'
 			'Her talking makes him finally look over at you and he smiles as well. "Yeah, come join us."'
-			'You''re too baffled to do anything, you stand there just staring at them. Then he speaks up again. "Maybe next time, but right now the lift is occupied." This makes her laugh, as she does he pushes one of the buttons, the doors close, and the elevator begins moving away from you.'
+			'You''re too baffled to do anything and just stand there staring at them before he speaks up. "Sorry, but we''re full in here." This makes her laugh as he pushes one of the buttons. The doors close and the elevator begins moving away from you.'
 		else
 			'She looks at you and laughs slightly, and then reaches over to push one of the elevator buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
 		end
@@ -295,7 +295,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'lift':
 		minut +=1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/elevator7.jpg"></center>'
-		'When the elevator door opens, you see two naked women standing in it! They look at you and each other and then laugh, one of them quickly reaches across and pushes one of the buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
+		'When the elevator door opens, you see two naked women standing in it. They look at you and then each other before laughing as one of them quickly reaches across and pushes one of the buttons. You''re too baffled to do anything until it''s too late. The door is already closed again, and the elevator is moving away from you.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building',$ARGS[1]
 	else
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/lift.jpg"></center>'
@@ -336,7 +336,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor1_events':
 	minut += 2
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor1_gop.jpg"></center>'
-	'On the first floor, taking up the stairs, is a large group of gopnik boys. You have seen several of them in the building and most of the rest around the neighborhood. You don''t think most of them live here. You know gopniks can be dangerous, especially in large groups. You could try and walk past them, or just leave.'
+	'A large group of gopnik boys are blocking the stairs up to the first floor. You''ve seen several of them in the building and most of the rest around the neighborhood. You don''t think most of them live here. You know gopniks can be dangerous, especially in large groups. You could try and walk past them, or just leave.'
 	act 'Leave': 
 		if $ARGS[1] = 'from_second_floor':
 			minut +=1 
@@ -347,7 +347,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor1_events':
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/lift.jpg"></center>'
-			'<center>Back in the elevator you decide to take it to another floor.'
+			'<center>You get back in the elevator and decide to take it to another floor.'
 			act 'Push button: Floor 2': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
 			act 'Push button: Floor 3': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_3', 'from_lift'
 			act 'Push button: Floor 4': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_4'
@@ -362,9 +362,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor1_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor1_gop.jpg"></center>'
 		if hotcat >= 5:
-			'You decide to push on and go past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them make comments, soon followed by them groping you. "Hey sweet heart, have a seat and drink with us.", "Damn girl you look fine, take a seat and take a load off, maybe help us get a load off" which gets several of them to laugh. "Don''t be shy beautiful, we won''t bite, unless you ask us nice." Along with several other even ruder comments followed by them laughing even more.'
+			'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them make comments, soon followed by them groping you. "Hey sweetheart, have a seat and drink with us.", "Damn girl you look fine, take a seat and take a load off, maybe help us get a load off!" which gets several of them to laugh. "Don''t be shy beautiful, we won''t bite, unless you ask us nicely." Several even ruder comments are said, followed by them laughing even more.'
 			*nl
-			'Several of them paw at your legs, or squeeze your butt. A couple even reach up and grab your breasts and squeeze, one even rubs your crotch. You do your best to fend off the groping hands but there are just too many of them to stop them all. You feel yourself starting to panic, thinking they might not stop at just groping. When you finally get past them, though, they stay seated.'
+			'Several of them paw at your legs, or squeeze your ass. A few reach up and grab your breasts and squeeze, one even rubs your crotch. You do your best to fend off the groping hands but there are just too many of them. You feel yourself starting to panic, thinking they might not stop at just groping. Thankfully, when you finally get past them, they stay seated.'
 			gs 'arousal', 'forplay', 3, 'humiliation'
 			gs 'arousal', 'end'
 			gs 'stat'
@@ -372,7 +372,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor1_events':
 			minut += 2
 			pcs_mood -15
 			gs 'stat'
-			'You decide to push on and go past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them give you dirty looks and others make comments. "Watch where you''re stepping you fat cow.", "Anyone else smell rotten fish?" and other such comments, at one point you think one of them might do something but then you are finally past them and on your way. But not without the experience ruining your mood.'
+			'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them give you dirty looks and others make comments. "Watch where you''re stepping you fat cow.", "Anyone else smell rotten fish?" and other such comments. At one point you think one of them might do something, but you make it past them unharmed. However, you are a little upset at the comments made towards you.'
 		end
 		act 'Leave the building': minut += 1 & gt 'city_residential', 'start'
 		act 'Go up to the second floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
@@ -403,7 +403,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_flash.jpg"></center>'
-		'A young woman stops on the stairs to the third floor in front of a young man. She pulls down her yoga pants, bending forward slightly, with her legs spread a bit. She gives the young man a real nice view of her naked ass and pussy, and he stops dead in his tracks when confronted with the view. Then the girl giggles, pulling up her pants, and runs up the stairs. The young man takes off after her. He goes up two stairs at a time, gaining on her quickly. They soon disappear on the next floor up and shortly afterwards you hear her squealing in delight, which means he must have caught up to her.'
+		'A young woman stops on the stairs to the third floor in front of a young man. She pulls down her yoga pants, bending forward slightly, with her legs spread a bit. She gives the young man a nice view of her naked ass and pussy, and he stops dead in his tracks when confronted with the view. The girl then giggles, pulls up her pants and runs up the stairs. The young man takes off after her, gaining on her quickly. They soon disappear on the next floor up and shortly afterwards you hear her squealing in delight.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -414,21 +414,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_girl.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a young woman, about your age, leaning against the wall. She is dressed in a tight, partially see-through, half-shirt that shows off her flat tummy, a very short skirt and mid calf high-heeled boots. All in all, fairly slutty. She looks at you as you approach and gives you a friendly smile. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
+		'You see a young woman, about your age, leaning against the wall. She is dressed in a tight, partially see-through, half-shirt that shows off her flat stomach, a very short skirt and mid calf high-heeled boots. All in all, fairly slutty. She looks at you as you approach and gives you a friendly smile. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_2'
 	elseif floor2 = 10 or floor2 = 11:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_gop.jpg"></center>'
-		'Sitting on the stairs are two young gopnik boys with a gopnik girl between them. They are all drinking from bottles and look a little drunk. They are all a couple of years younger than you are. As you squeeze your way past them they give you dirty looks, but don''t say anything.'
+		'Sitting on the stairs are two young gopnik boys with a gopnik girl between them. They are all drinking from bottles and look a little drunk. They are all a few years younger than you. As you squeeze your way past them they give you dirty looks, but don''t say anything.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_2'
 	elseif floor2 = 12:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_naked.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a woman walking down the hall to the stairwell landing, completely naked. When she see''s you, she smiles at you. "Hello" she says, as if everything was normal. You say hi back and try not to stare. She walks right past you, down the hallway of the other wing of the building, and then enters one of the apartments down there.'
+		'You see a woman walking down the hall to the stairwell landing, completely naked. When she sees you, she smiles. "Hello!" she says, as if everything was normal. You greet her in return and try not to stare. She walks right past you and down the hallway of the other wing of the building, entering one of the apartments down there.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -438,7 +438,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor2_nudedoor.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a woman standing outside, next to an apartment door. You are quite distracted as she is naked from the waist up. She was in the process of pulling her dress down while a man watched. When she sees you, she looks panicked and quickly pulls her dress back up, before running into the apartment she was standing next to. The young man laughs, looks at you, and winks. Then he follows her inside.'
+		'You see a woman standing outside, next to an apartment door. You are quite distracted as she is naked from the waist up, having been in the process of pulling her dress down while a man watched. When she sees you, she panics and quickly pulls her dress back up before running into the apartment. The young man laughs, looks at you and winks before following her inside.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -458,7 +458,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor2_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor2_bj.jpg"></center>'
-		'On the stairs there is a naked man and a woman dressed in see through lingerie. She is squatting in front of him with her legs spread, showing off her pussy, while she sucks his dick. He looks at you as you approach and gives you a huge smile. He backs up against the wall as best as he can and pulls her over a bit, giving you just enough room to squeeze past them. She never does stop giving him a blow job, even as you brush past her.'
+		'Sitting on the stairs is a naked man and a woman dressed in see through lingerie. She is squatting in front of him with her legs spread, showing off her pussy while she sucks his dick. He looks at you as you approach and gives you a huge smile. He backs up against the wall as best as he can and pulls her over a bit, giving you just enough room to squeeze past them. She never does stop giving him a blowjob, even as you brush past her.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -485,7 +485,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the stairwell there appears to be a young woman who is passed out on the landing. Her belongings are sitting on the stairs near her, you have no idea how long she has been laying here passed out.'
+		'A young woman appears to be passed out on the landing, her belongings sitting on the stairs near her. You have no idea how long she has been here.'
 		act 'Ignore her and continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_3'
 		act 'Help her': 
 			*clr & cla
@@ -493,9 +493,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 			mood +10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop to check on her, she seems fine. You can smell the alcohol on her before you even get to close to her. You shake her and she doesn''t wake up. You squat down next to her, grabbing both of her shoulders, and shake her really hard. It takes a couple of minutes of shaking but she finally wakes up, her breath has a nearly overwhelming smell of alcohol on it. She mutters something about five more minutes, but you finally manage to get her up and on her feet. After asking her where she lives you finally find out she lives on the next floor up. You help her upstairs to her apartment, she tries to use her keys to open the door, but fails and drops them.'
-			*nl
-			'Before you can pick up the keys, the door opens. An older woman takes one look at the drunk woman and start ranting at her. She takes the young woman from you and thanks you for helping her. Once she has retrieved the keys from the floor and helped the young woman inside, she closes the door. You can hear her still berating the younger woman through the door.'
+			'You stop to check on her. She seems fine, but you can smell the alcohol on her before you even get to close to her. You shake her and she doesn''t wake up. You squat down next to her, grabbing both of her shoulders, and shake her really hard. It takes a few minutes of shaking but she finally wakes up, her breath having a near overwhelming smell of alcohol on it. She mutters something about five more minutes, but you finally manage to get her up and on her feet. You find out she lives on the next floor up and help her upstairs to her apartment. She tries to use her keys to open the door, but fails and drops them.'
+		    'Before you can pick up the keys, the door opens. An older woman takes one look at the drunk woman and start ranting at her. She takes the young woman from you and thanks you for helping her. Once she has retrieved the keys from the floor and helped the young woman inside, she closes the door. You can hear her berating the younger woman through the door.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 		end
 	elseif floor3 = 5:
@@ -503,7 +502,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_flash.jpg"></center>'
-		'An older woman stops on the stairs to the fourth floor for a moment, in front of a older man. She pulls her skirt up, exposing her pussy to the man. She drops the skirt back in place and he walks up the few steps to her and gives her a kiss. After they kiss a bit, they walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
+		'An older woman stops on the stairs to the fourth floor for a moment, in front of an older man. She pulls her skirt up, briefly exposing her pussy to him before she drops her skirt back in place and he walks up the few steps to her and gives her a kiss. After they kiss a bit, they walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -514,7 +513,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_girls.jpg"></center>'
-		'Two young girls sit on the stairs filling bottles of juice with vodka. They both look a couple of years younger than you. They, for the most part, ignore you as you walk past them, intent on their task at hand.'
+		'Two young girls sit on the stairs filling bottles of juice with vodka. They both look a few years younger than you. They, for the most part, ignore you as you walk past them, intent on their task at hand.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_3'
 	elseif floor3 = 9 or floor3 = 10 or floor3 = 11:
 		*clr & cla
@@ -532,7 +531,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 				minut += 2
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/lift.jpg"></center>'
-				'<center>Back in the elevator you decide to take it to another floor.'
+				'<center>You get back in the elevator and decide to take it to another floor.'
 				act 'Push button: Floor 1': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_1', 'from_lift'
 				act 'Push button: Floor 2': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
 				act 'Push button: Floor 4': gt 'city_apt_building','floor_4'
@@ -547,9 +546,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 			menu_off = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_gop.jpg"></center>'
 			if hotcat >= 5:
-				'You decide to push on and go past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them make comments, which are soon followed by them groping you. "Hey sweetheart, have a seat and drink with us.", "Damn girl, you look fine! Take a seat and take a load off, maybe help us get a load off", which gets several of them to laugh. "Don''t be shy, Beautiful, we won''t bite. Not unless you ask us to nicely." All this along with several other even ruder comments, followed by them laughing even more.'
+				'You decide to push on and walk past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them make comments, which are soon followed by them groping you. "Hey sweetheart, have a seat and drink with us.", "Damn girl, you look fine! Take a seat and take a load off, maybe help us get a load off!" which gets several of them to laugh. "Don''t be shy beautiful, we won''t bite. Not unless you ask us to nicely." Several even ruder comments are made, followed by them laughing even more.'
 				*nl
-				'Several of them paw at your legs, or squeeze your butt. A couple even reach up and grab your breasts and squeeze, one even rubs your crotch. You do your best to fend off the groping hands but there are just too many of them to stop them all. You feel yourself starting to panic. They might not stop at just groping! But you finally get past them, and they stay seated.'
+				'Several of them paw at your legs, or squeeze your ass. A couple reach up and grab your breasts and squeeze, one even rubs your crotch. You do your best to fend off the groping hands but there are just too many of them and you feel yourself starting to panic. They might not stop at just groping. Thankfully, when you finally get past them, they stay seated.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'forplay', 3, 'humiliation'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -557,7 +556,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 				minut += 2
 				pcs_mood -15
 				gs 'stat'
-				'You decide to push on and go past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them give you dirty looks and others make comments. "Watch where you''re stepping you fat cow.", "Anyone else smell rotten fish?" and other such comments, at one point you think one of them might do something but then you are finally past them and on your way. But not without the experience ruining your mood.'
+				'You decide to push on and go past them. As you carefully step around them, you can''t help but brush up against them. Several of them give you dirty looks and others make comments. "Watch where you''re stepping you fat cow.", "Anyone else smell rotten fish?" and other such comments. You think one of them might do something, but you make it past them unharmed. However, you are a little upset at the comments directed towards you.'
 			end
 			act 'Go down to the second floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_2'
 			act 'Go up to the fourth floor': minut +=1 & gt 'city_apt_building','floor_4'
@@ -568,7 +567,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_naked.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a woman walking down the stairs, completely naked. When she sees you she smiles at you. "Hello" she says as if everything was normal. You say hi back and try not to stare. She walks right past you, down one of the hallways, and then enters one of the apartments down there.'
+		'You see a woman walking down the stairs, completely naked. When she sees you she smiles. "Hello!" she says as if everything was normal. You greet her in return and try not to stare. She walks right past you and down one of the hallways, entering one of the apartments down there.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -580,13 +579,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_nudedoor.jpg"></center>'
 		if meet_nudedoor_woman3 = 0:
 			meet_nudedoor_woman3 = 1
-			'As you are about to walk by one of the apartments that has a door right into the stairwell, the door suddenly opens. A young, nude, woman is standing there, only wearing a smile. She laughs a bit when she sees you. "Sorry I thought you were someone else."'
-			'You can''t help but smile back at her. "It''s ok, I don''t mind."'
-			'She laughs at that. "Well, nice meeting you." Then she closes the door.'
+			'As you are about to walk by one of the apartments, the door suddenly opens. A young, nude woman is standing there, wearing only a smile. She laughs a little when she sees you. "Sorry I thought you were someone else."'
+			'You can''t help but smile back at her. "It''s okay, I don''t mind."'
+			'She laughs at that. "Well, nice meeting you." she says before closing the door.'
 		else
-			'As you are about to walk by one of the apartments that has a door right into the stairwell, the door suddenly opens. A young, nude, woman is standing there only wearing a smile. She laughs when she sees you again. "Sorry again, I thought you were my boyfriend coming home."'
-			'You can''t help but smile back at her. "Not a problem he is a lucky man to have you greet him in such a way."'
-			'She laughs at that. "Thanks! Well, nice meeting you again." Then she closes the door.'
+			'As you are about to walk by one of the apartments, the door suddenly opens. A young, nude woman is standing there wearing only a smile. She laughs when she sees you again. "Sorry again, I thought you were my boyfriend coming home."'
+			'You can''t help but smile back at her. "Not a problem. He is a lucky man to have you greet him in such a way."'
+			'She laughs at that. "Thanks! Well, nice seeing you again." she says before closing the door.'
 		end
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
@@ -597,7 +596,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor3_up.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you get to the stairwell landing, you see a woman walking up to the fourth floor with a man following her. As she nearly gets to the top of the stairs, she lifts her skirt and shows off her naked butt. The guy laughs and then lunges for her, she giggles and takes off up the stairs. A moment later they disappear, shortly followed by the sound of a door opening and closing.'
+		'As you get to the stairwell landing, you see a woman walking up to the fourth floor with a man following her. As she nears the top of the stairs, she lifts her skirt and shows off her naked ass. The guy laughs and then lunges for her, but she giggles and takes off up the stairs. A moment later they disappear, shortly followed by the sound of a door opening and closing.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -607,7 +606,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor3_ir.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a middle-aged woman making out with a younger, black man. Her hand is on the doorknob of a slightly opened apartment door, you assume she lives there. You don''t know if the man lives with her or not. They seem completely oblivious to you as you walk past them.'
+		'You see a middle-aged woman making out with a younger, black man. Her hand is on the doorknob of a slightly opened apartment door, which you assume is hers. You don''t know if the man lives with her or not. They seem completely oblivious to you as you walk past them.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -617,7 +616,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor3_bj.jpg"></center>'
-		'Down one of the hallways, leading to more apartments on this floor, you see an older woman on her knees, dressed in a white teddy. She is in front of a black man without pants. She is currently is sucking his cock. She has a collar around her neck with a leash attached to it, that the man is holding as she sucks his dick. The man glances your way and smiles at you as you continue on your way.'
+		'Down one of the hallways, leading to more apartments on this floor, you see an older woman on her knees in front of a man. She is dressed in a white teddy, a collar around her neck with a leash attached to it that the man is holding as she sucks his dick. The man glances your way and smiles at you as you continue on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -627,7 +626,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor3_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor3_fuck.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning a grunting. The obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman, by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the stairs, you see in the stairwell landing there is a woman on her back, but you can''t really make her out, other than her bare legs spread wide. A man is between her legs, thrusting, with his pants pulled down just enough to expose his bare butt. Another man appears to be passed out, or sleeping, next to the two having sex. You are unsure what the story is here, but you figure it is likely a good one and that the sleeping man will likely not enjoy the story as much as everyone else, if he ever learns of it.'
+		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman, by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the stairs, you see a woman in the stairwell on her back, but you can''t really make her out, other than her bare legs spread wide. A man is thrusting between her legs with his pants pulled down. Another man appears to be passed out, or sleeping, next to the two having sex. You are unsure what the story is here, but you figure it is likely a good one and that the sleeping man will likely not enjoy the story as much as everyone else, if he ever learns of it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -648,7 +647,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_clothed.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see one of your neighbors, a young woman about your age. She is sitting on the steps. She scoots over when you approach to allow you to walk past her. She gives you a friendly smile and a wave. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
+		'You see one of your neighbors, a young woman about your age, sitting on the steps. She scoots over when you approach to allow you to walk past her. She gives you a friendly smile and a wave. You exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 	elseif floor4 = 4 or floor4 = 5:
 		*clr & cla
@@ -656,7 +655,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'On the stairs appears to be a young woman, passed out. Her belongings are sitting on the stairs near her. You have no idea how long she has been laying here passed out.'
+		'A young woman appears to be passed out on the stairs, her belongings sitting on the stairs near her. You have no idea how long she has been laying here.'
 		act 'Ignore her and continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 		act 'Help her': 
 			*clr & cla
@@ -664,9 +663,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 			mood +10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stop to check on her, she seems fine. You can smell the alcohol on her before you even get close to her. You shake her and she doesn''t wake up. You squat down next to her, grabbing both her shoulders, and shake her really hard. It takes a couple of minutes of shaking but she finally wakes up, her breath has a nearly overwhelming smell of alcohol on it. She mutters something about five more minutes, but you finally manage to get her up and on her feet. After asking her where she lives you finally find out she lives on this floor. You help her to her apartment, she tries to use her keys to open the door, but fails and drops them.'
-			*nl
-			'Before you can pick up the keys, the door opens. An older woman takes one look at the drunk woman and starts ranting at her. She takes the young woman from you and thanks you for helping her. Once she has retrieved the keys from the floor and helped the young woman inside, she closes the door. You can hear her still berating the younger woman through the door.'
+			'You stop to check on her. She seems fine, but you can smell the alcohol on her before you even get close to her. You shake her and she doesn''t wake up. You squat down next to her, grabbing both her shoulders, and shake her really hard. It takes a few minutes of shaking but she finally wakes up, her breath having a near overwhelming smell of alcohol on it. She mutters something about five more minutes, but you finally manage to get her up and on her feet. You find out she lives on this floor and you help her to her apartment. She tries to use her keys to open the door, but fails and drops them.'
+			'Before you can pick up the keys, the door opens. An older woman takes one look at the drunk woman and starts ranting at her. She takes the young woman from you and thanks you for helping her. Once she has retrieved the keys from the floor and helped the young woman inside, she closes the door. You can hear her berating the younger woman through the door.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 		end
 	elseif floor4 = 6:
@@ -685,7 +683,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_girls.jpg"></center>'
-		'Two young girls sit on the stairs talking, they both look a couple of years younger than you. They, for the most part, ignore you as you walk past them - absorbed in their conversation. You can''t help but overhear parts of their conversation. Boys. They are talking about how cute some boys are that they know.'
+		'Two young girls sit on the stairs talking. They both look a few years younger than you. They, for the most part, ignore you as you walk past them - absorbed in their conversation. You can''t help but overhear parts of their conversation. Boys. They are talking about how cute some boys that they know are.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 	elseif floor4 = 10 or floor4 = 11 or floor3 = 12:
 		*clr & cla
@@ -700,7 +698,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_naked.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the stairwell between the floors you see a girl, about your age, leaning against the wall. She is completely naked and smoking a cigarette. When she sees you, she smiles at you. "Hello" she says, as if everything was normal. You say hi back and try not to stare. She continues to smoke as you walk by her.'
+		'In the stairwell between the floors you see a girl, about your age, leaning against the wall. She is completely naked and smoking a cigarette. When she sees you, she smiles. "Hello!" she says, as if everything was normal. You greet her in return and try not to stare. She continues to smoke as you walk by her.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -711,14 +709,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		meet_nudedoor_woman3 = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_shop'+rand(1,2)+'.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a beautiful woman dressed in nice clothes carrying a shopping bag. You have seen her around before, you know she lives on this floor. Almost every time you see her she is carrying some shopping bags. She either makes plenty of money or someone else buys her a lot of stuff. She smiles to you as she heads towards her apartment.'
+		'You see a beautiful woman dressed in nice clothes carrying a shopping bag. You have seen her around before and you know she lives on this floor. Almost every time you see her she is carrying some shopping bags. She either makes plenty of money or someone else buys her a lot of stuff. She smiles at you as she heads towards her apartment.'
 		act 'Leave': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 	elseif floor4 = 17:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor4_up.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you get to the stairwell landing you see a man looking up the stairs at a middle aged-woman. She is wearing a robe that is hanging wide open. She is completely naked under the robe, her breasts and trimmed pussy on full display. They both look at you and smile, the guy pulls out his phone and starts taking her picture. After that they both mostly ignore you as you go on your way.'
+		'As you get to the stairwell landing you see a man looking up the stairs at a middle aged-woman. She is wearing a robe that is hanging wide open. She is completely naked, her breasts and trimmed pussy on full display. They both look at you and smile before the guy pulls out his phone and starts taking pictures. After that they both ignore you as you go on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -728,9 +726,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor4_bdsm.jpg"></center>'
-		'On the stair landing, bent over the stair railing, is a woman. She is wearing black baby doll lingerie, stockings, black high heels, as well as ankle and wrist cuffs. The ankle cuffs are attached to the railing in such a way as it forces her legs apart. Her hands are attached on the other side of the railing together. She blushes when she sees you, but you also notice that she smiles as she looks away from you. You get the feeling she is enjoying the humiliation of being found like this.'
+		'On the landing, bent over the railing, is a woman. She is wearing black baby doll lingerie, stockings and black high heels, as well as ankle and wrist cuffs. The ankle cuffs are attached to the railing in a way that forces her legs apart. Her hands are attached on the other side of the railing together. She blushes when she sees you, but you also notice that she smiles as she looks away from you. You get the feeling she is enjoying the humiliation of being found like this.'
 		*nl
-		'As you walk past her, you can''t help but notice she is not wearing panties under the baby doll lingerie. This gives you a full view of her pussy and the cum dripping down her inner thighs. You glance around but you don''t see anyone else around, and she seems content to remain like this, so you go on your way.'
+		'As you walk past her, you can''t help but notice she is not wearing panties under the baby doll lingerie. This gives you a full view of her pussy and the cum dripping down her inner thighs. You glance around but don''t see anyone else around, and she seems content to remain like this, so you go on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -740,7 +738,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor4_bottle.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you make your way to the stairs you notice a few gopnik boys, who seem focused on someone else, as they are giving them encouragement to keep going. As you get close enough to see what they see, you see a young woman naked from the waist down sitting on a bottle - well, more apt to say, fucking a bottle with her butt. When she sees you, she blushes and quickly jumps up and runs down one of the halls. She is quickly followed by the boys, one of whom pauses long enough to give you a dirty look for ruining their fun.'
+		'As you make your way to the stairs you notice a few gopnik boys, who seem focused on someone else as they are giving them encouragement to keep going. As you get close enough, you see a young woman naked from the waist down fucking her ass with a bottle. When she sees you, she blushes and quickly jumps up and runs down one of the hallways. She is quickly followed by the boys, one of whom pauses long enough to give you a dirty look for ruining their fun.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -750,7 +748,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor4_bj.jpg"></center>'
-		'A young man stands on the stairs in the stairwell with his pants pulled down just enough for his cock to be free. A girl, about his age stands on the landing, bent forward, sucking his dick for all it is worth. As you move past them, he grins at you and takes ahold of the back of her head with his hands and starts face fucking the girl. He begins forcing his dick balls deep into her mouth and down her throat, and you can hear her gagging. Just before the sounds of them fade completely you hear him say,  "Fuck yeah, swallow it, Bitch!"'
+		'A young man stands on the stairs in the stairwell with his pants pulled down just enough for his cock to be free. A girl, about his age, is bent over and sucking his dick for all it is worth. As you move past them, he grins at you and grabs hold of the back of her head with his hands and starts face fucking the girl. He begins forcing his dick balls deep into her mouth and down her throat, and you can hear her gagging. Just before the sounds of them fade completely you hear him say "Fuck yeah, swallow it bitch!"'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -760,7 +758,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor4_fuck.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting. The obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman, by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the landing you see, down one of the halls, a light-skinned black girl, about your age. Her pants are pulled down to her knees, while she is leaning forward with her hands on the wall, and her bare butt stuck out. A slightly older man stands behind her, fucking her, by the looks and the sounds of it. She looks in your direction, but you are not sure if she noticed you or not. She looks, and sounds like she is really enjoying herself. You decide to move and leave them to it.'
+		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman, by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the landing you see, down one of the halls, a light-skinned black girl, about your age. Her pants are pulled down to her knees as she leans forward with her hands on the wall, her ass sticking out. A slightly older man is fucking her from behind. She looks in your direction, but you''re not sure if she noticed you or not. She looks, and sounds, like she is really enjoying herself. You decide to move on and leave them to it.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -768,26 +766,26 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor4_events':
 	elseif floor4 = 22 or floor4 = 23 and (week < 6 and hour >= 19 and hour <= 23) or (week >=6 and hour >= 10 and hour <= 23):
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src=images/characters/city/tryndin/tryndin_stairs.jpg></center>'
 		if trychat = 0:
-			'You see a young man, maybe about your sister''s age, in the hallway. He is a pretty good-looking guy, you can''t help but notice. He looks up at you as you get close and gives you a pleasant smile. "You''ve moved into apartment 49, right?"'
-			act 'Yes, I live in the apartment 49':
+			'You see a young man, around your sister''s age, in the hallway. You can''t help but notice that he''s pretty good looking. He looks up at you as you get close and gives you a pleasant smile. "You''ve moved into apartment 49, right?"'
+			act 'Yes':
 				*clr & cla
 				trychat += 1
 				minut += 5
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big77.jpg"></center>'
-				'You nod, confirming that you live in apartment 49. "Yeah, I live in apartment 49" you tell him.'
-				'The guy looks visibly delighted and says, "Wonderful, it''s always nice meeting new people. By the way I''m Tryndin, and you are?"'
+				'You nod. "Yeah, I live in apartment 49." you tell him.'
+				'The guy looks visibly delighted and says "Wonderful, it''s always nice meeting new people. By the way I''m Tryndin, and you are?"'
 				act '<<$pcs_nickname>>':
 					*clr & cla
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/shared/photos/big77.jpg"></center>'
 					'"My name is <<$pcs_nickname>>," you say.'
-					'He nods his head and turns towards a nearby door. The door has number 37 on it. Digging in his pocket, he pulls out a set of keys and begins to unlock the door. "Pretty name. I live in this apartment here. I need to get going now, so I''ll see you around, I hope." As he opens the door an elderly woman looks out at him, and then to you, giving you a disapproving look. As Tryndin enters the apartment, he says irritably, "Mother, stop hanging around the front door!" then he goes in and closes the door.'
+					'He nods his head and turns towards a nearby door. The door has number 37 on it. Digging in his pocket, he pulls out a set of keys and begins to unlock the door. "That''s a pretty name. I live in this apartment here. I need to get going, but I hope to see you around." As he opens the door an elderly woman looks out at him, and then at you, giving you a disapproving look. "Mother, stop hanging around the front door!" he says in an annoyed tone before he closes the door.'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 				end
 			end
 		else
-			'Your neighbor, <a href="exec:Gt ''tryndin''">Tryndin</a>, is in the hallway. He''s smoking a cigarette, flicking the ashes into a jar.He gives you a nod when he notices you, "Hello."'
+			'Your neighbor, <a href="exec:Gt ''tryndin''">Tryndin</a>, is in the hallway. He''s smoking a cigarette, flicking the ashes into a jar. He gives you a nod when he notices you. "Hello."'
 			act 'Say "hello" and leave': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_4'
 			act 'Have a chat with Tryndin': gt 'tryndin', 'stairwell_chat'
 		end
@@ -813,14 +811,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_drunk.jpg"></center>'
-		'On the stairs is a girl, a couple of years younger than you are. She is drinking from a bottle and obviously very drunk. She grins at you as you approach, you exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
+		'On the stairs is a girl, a few years younger than you. She is drinking from a bottle and obviously very drunk. She grins at you as you approach and you exchange hellos before you go on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_5'
 	elseif floor5 = 6:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_flash.jpg"></center>'
-		'A middle-aged woman at the top of the stairs is looking down at a man near the landing of the stairs below. She pulls up her top to expose her tits to him. They both laugh at that, then she hurries down the stairs to catch up to him. They exchange a quick kiss and then walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
+		'A middle-aged woman at the top of the stairs is looking down at a man near the landing of the stairs below. She pulls up her top to expose her tits to him and they both laugh before she hurries down the stairs to catch up to him. They exchange a quick kiss and then walk down the stairs hand-in-hand.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -831,21 +829,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		minut += 2
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_girls.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the hallway near the roof access there are two girls and guy. One girl is sitting and looking in your direction, while the other is on all-fours with the guy behind her. They are all clothed but the guy acts like he is humping the girl on all-fours, they all seem to find it funny. They continue on talking and playing around as you continue on your way.'
+		'In the hallway near the roof access are two girls and guy. One girl is sitting and looking in your direction, while the other is on all-fours with the guy behind her. They are all clothed but the guy acts like he is fucking the girl and they all seem to find it funny. They keep talking and playing around as you continue on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_5'
 	elseif floor5 = 10 or floor5 = 11 or floor5 = 12:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_gop.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the hallway a couple of gopniks, in their mid-twenties, are squatting next to a tiny table. They have a couple of drinks and some food sat on the table. They talk, laugh, and smoke as they eat. When you walk past them they offer you some food, but you politely decline - as it doesn''t look very good - and continue on your way.'
+		'In the hallway are a few gopniks, squatting next to a tiny table. They have a few drinks and some food sat on the table. They talk, laugh and smoke as they eat and drink. When you walk past them they offer you some food, but you politely decline - as it doesn''t look very good - and continue on your way.'
 		act 'Continue': gt 'city_apt_building', 'floor_5'
 	elseif floor5 = 13:
 		*clr & cla
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/floor5_naked.jpg"></center>'
-		'You see a woman walking down the stairs to the fourth floor. She is completely naked. She seems to be in no hurry and doesn''t turn to look in your direction, you shake your head slightly and continue on your way.'
+		'You see a woman walking down the stairs to the fourth floor, completely naked. She seems to be in no hurry and doesn''t turn to look in your direction. You shake your head slightly and continue on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_nudity', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -855,7 +853,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor5_bdsm.jpg"></center>'
-		'In the hallway are two young woman. One is blonde and she is wearing boots and a skirt, while naked from the waist up. The other, a brunette, is completely naked with her hands are tied behind her back. As you watch the blonde puts a large collar around the other one''s neck, and then attaches a leash to it. With the leash in place, she steps back, unbinds the brunette''s hands, and slaps the other girl on the ass - who drops to the floor on all-fours. Then the blonde starts walking holding onto the leash as the brunette follows behind like a dog being lead on a leash. The blonde smiles to you and waves, you exchange hellos with her. The brunette never says a word and then they move past you. After a moment you continue on your way.'
+		'In the hallway are two young woman. One is blonde and she is wearing boots and a skirt, while naked from the waist up. The other, a brunette, is completely naked with her hands are tied behind her back. As you watch the blonde puts a large collar around the other one''s neck, and then attaches a leash to it. With the leash in place, she steps back, unbinds the brunette''s hands, and slaps her on the ass. She drops to the floor on all-fours and the blonde starts walking, holding onto the leash as the brunette follows behind like a dog. The blonde smiles at you and waves and you exchange hellos with her. The brunette never says a word as they move past you. After taking a moment to reflect on what you just seen, you continue on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -872,7 +870,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor5_bj.jpg"></center>'
-		'A man stands on the stairs in the stairwell completely naked with his back to the wall. A woman, about his age, stands on the stairs a couple of steps down, also completely naked. She is bent forward sucking his dick for all it is worth. As you go past them, he grins at you and takes ahold of the back of her head with his hands and starts face fucking the girl. He begins forcing his dick balls-deep into her mouth and down her throat, you can hear her gagging as he does so. Just before the sounds of them fades completely you hear him, "Oh my god, that was so amazing!"'
+		'A man stands on the stairs in the stairwell completely naked with his back to the wall. A woman, about his age, stands on the stairs a couple of steps down, also completely naked. She is bent forward sucking his dick for all it is worth. As you go past them, he grins at you and takes hold of the back of her head with his hands and starts face fucking the girl. He begins forcing his dick balls-deep into her mouth and down her throat, you can hear her gagging as he does so. Just before the sounds of them fades completely you hear him shout "Oh my god, that was amazing!"'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'
@@ -882,7 +880,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'floor5_events':
 		menu_off = 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/resident/apartment/stairs/event/sex/floor5_fuck.jpg"></center>'
-		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning a grunting. The obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the stairs, you see that in the stairwell landing there is a woman on her back, but you can''t really make her out - other than her bare legs spread wide. A topless man is between her legs, thrusting, with his pants pulled down just enough to expose his bare butt. As you get closer, the man see''s you, giving you a huge grin and a thumbs up. He doesn''t stop thrusting into the woman underneath him as he does. Feeling a bit awkward you continue on your way.'
+		'As you approach the stairs, you hear moaning and grunting, the obvious sounds of people having sex. A man and woman by the sounds of the moans. As you get to the stairs, you see a woman on her back in the stairwell, but you can''t really make her out - other than her bare legs spread wide. A topless man with his pants pulled down is between her legs, thrusting. As you get closer, the man sees you and gives you a huge grin and a thumbs up. He doesn''t stop thrusting into the woman underneath him as he does. Feeling a little awkward, you continue on your way.'
 		gs 'arousal', 'erotic_sex', 3
 		gs 'arousal', 'end'
 		gs 'stat'

+ 1 - 1
locations/restoran.qsrc

@@ -29,7 +29,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'maitred':
 	if ($clothingworntype = 'moncheri_dress' or $clothingworntype = 'moncheri_gown') and pcs_makeup > 1 and pcs_hairbsh = 1 and pcs_sweat < 20:
 		'<center><b><font color="maroon">Babel</font></b></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/expensiverest/maitredseat.jpg"></center>'
-		'The well-dressed maître d'' politely asks you whether you would prefer the VIP section or the common room'
+		'The well-dressed maître d'' politely asks whether you would prefer the VIP section or the common room.'
 
 		if money >= 5000:
 			act 'Go to the VIP room (5,000 <b>₽</b>)':