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[text edit] clean up sister_chat

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1 změnil soubory, kde provedl 100 přidání a 101 odebrání
  1. 100 101
      locations/sister_chat.qsrc

+ 100 - 101
locations/sister_chat.qsrc

@@ -65,7 +65,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'checks':
 				gs 'stat'
 				narkossister = 0
 				*nl
-				'You tell yourself "Come on <<$pcs_nickname>>, deep breath, focus. You can do this."'
+				'You tell yourself, "Come on <<$pcs_nickname>>, deep breath, focus. You can do this."'
 				'You feel your head is clear enough to talk to your sister once more.'
 				act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			end
@@ -75,7 +75,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'checks':
 		if $clothingworntype = 'nude':
 			if sisterQW['naked'] = 0:
 				sisterQW['naked'] = 1
-				'Anya looks at you, her eyes wide. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what are you doing? What if someone walks in and sees you like this? Mom would throw a fit if she catches you walking around naked like that. Sometimes I just don''t understand you."'
+				'Anya looks at you, her eyes wide. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, what are you doing? What if someone walks in and sees you like this? Mom would throw a fit if she caught you walking around naked like that. Sometimes I just don''t understand you."'
 			else
 				'Anya shakes her head at you. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, sooner or later mom is going to catch you and tan your ass.'
 				act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -93,7 +93,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'checks':
 				minut += 1
 				'She pauses for a moment and looks at you, eyebrow raised. "You don''t know how to braid your own hair?"'
 				'You look down embarrassed. "I usually just go to the salon for them to braid it..."'
-				'She laughs and gives you a hug. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, of course I will teach you how to braid your hair, though it make take a while."'
+				'She laughs and gives you a hug. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, of course I will teach you how to braid your hair, though it might take a while."'
 				act 'Spend time learning how to braid your hair.':
 					minut += 60
 					canBraidHair = 1
@@ -101,13 +101,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'checks':
 					*clr & cla
 					'You make plenty of mistakes and get your hair in a knot a couple of times, but eventually you feel confident enough to braid your hair on your own.'
 					act 'Thank your sister and leave': gt $loc, $loc_arg
-					act 'chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
+					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
 				act 'Thank her but say you actually have to get going':
 					minut += 3
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
-					'She shrugs her head and says "Come back if you want to learn how <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
+					'She shrugs her head and says, "Come back if you want to learn how <<$pcs_nickname>>!"'
 					act 'Thank your sister and leave': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
@@ -138,7 +138,7 @@ $narkosisterspalila = {
 	gs 'stat'
 	!'sister slept on drugs.'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-	'"Come on <<$pcs_firstname>>, keep it together! Act sober." you think to yourself. "I just have to talk normally and not think about it."'
+	'"Come on <<$pcs_firstname>>, keep it together! Act sober," you think to yourself. "I just have to talk normally and not think about it."'
 	'Your sister looks at you, her eyebrow raised. "Are you stoned <<$pcs_nickname>>?"'
 	act 'No':
 		cla
@@ -153,7 +153,7 @@ $narkosisterspalila = {
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
 		'You admit that you learned where to buy drugs and you really wanted to try them out, just this once.'
-		'Anya looks at you sternly and says "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m not your mother, who would kill you if she found out, but this is the first and last time. It''s not worth it!"'
+		'Anya looks at you sternly and says, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, I''m not your mother, who would kill you if she found out, but this is the first and last time. It''s not worth it!"'
 		'"If you continue, then your whole life will not be worth shit."'
 		act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		exit
@@ -187,7 +187,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			if $clothingworntype ! 'nude':
 				'"You''re pregnant <<$pcs_nickname>>?!" your sister exclaims in surprise.'
 				'"How the hell can you tell?" you reply.'
-				'With a smile, she says "I have a bionic eye." She reaches out and rubs your protruding belly. "So, do you know who the father is?"'
+				'With a smile, she says, "I have a bionic eye." She reaches out and rubs your protruding belly. "So, do you know who the father is?"'
 			else
 				'You sister looks at your belly with surprise. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, are you pregnant? Who the hell knocked you up!?"'
 			end
@@ -225,7 +225,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 				if $tmpstr2 ! '':
 					$tmpa = ' You decide to start by telling her the easy news. "<<$tmpstr>>it''s possible the father is <<$tmpstr2>>. I think it could also be someone we know.'
 				else
-					$tmpa = ' You look at her for a moment and then say "I think the father might be someone we know."'
+					$tmpa = ' You look at her for a moment and then say, "I think the father might be someone we know."'
 				end
 				'You realize that telling her who the father is could be difficult.<<$tmpa>>'
 				idx = 0
@@ -243,19 +243,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						'You <<$tmpb>>the father might <<$tmpc>>be Roma.'
 						'"You mean [i]my[/i] Roma?"'
 						'You nod with a forced smile.'
-						'"Oh, I am so sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>! This is probably my fault." she says and hugs you tightly.'
+						'"Oh, I am so sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>! This is probably my fault," she says and hugs you tightly.'
 						pcs_mood += 50
 					elseif $fath = 'Kolka':
 						'You <<$tmpb>>the father could <<$tmpc>>be Kolka.'
-						'"Seriously?" she asks with a little shock. "You had sex with our little brother? What is wrong with you!?"'
-						'You feel yourself blushing as you murmur "I don''t know, it just felt right." She just shakes her head at you.'
+						'"Seriously?" she asks, sounding shocked. "You had sex with our little brother? What is wrong with you!?"'
+						'You feel yourself blushing as you murmur, "I don''t know, it just felt right." She just shakes her head at you.'
 					elseif $fath = 'Stepfather':
 						'You <<$tmpb>>the father could <<$tmpc>>be your stepfather.'
 						'"Oh, what a slut you are!" she smiles happily. "Do you think he will notice it too?"'
 					elseif $fath = 'our real father':
-						'You <<$tmpb>> the father might conceivably <<$tmpc>>be your real father.'
+						'You <<$tmpb>> the father could conceivably <<$tmpc>>be your real father.'
 						'Your sister looks at you with shock. "What is wrong with you <<$pcs_nickname>>?! How did you even find him?"'
-						'You explain how you tracked him down through the truck drivers and how your relationship quickly grew into something unexpected for both of you. "I haven''t told him." you tell her. "Maybe I should. I don''t know."'
+						'You explain how you tracked him down through the truck drivers and how your relationship quickly grew into something unexpected for both of you. "I haven''t told him," you tell her. "Maybe I should. I don''t know."'
 						'She listens intently to your story and gives you a hug when you finish. "I don''t know either <<$pcs_nickname>>, but I hope you take me to meet him someday."'
 					end
 					if idx = 0 and sz > 1:
@@ -287,13 +287,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			sisterQW['partyday'] = daystart
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_1.jpg"></center>'
 			if sisterQW['rexbday'] = 0:
-				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s one of my friend''s birthday this Friday and he''s having a party. I asked him if I could invite you."'
-				'"I don''t know. They are your friends and I don''t really know any of them."'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, it''s one of my friend''s birthday this Friday, and he''s having a party. I asked him if I could invite you."'
+				'"I don''t know. They are your friends, and I don''t really know any of them."'
 			elseif sisterQW['partycount'] = 0:
 				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, one of my friends is having a party this Friday. I asked him if I could invite you."'
-				'"I don''t know. They are your friends and I don''t really know any of them."'
+				'"I don''t know. They are your friends, and I don''t really know any of them."'
 			else
-				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, Rex is having another party this Friday. I asked him if I could invite you again and he said yes."'
+				'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, Rex is having another party this Friday. I asked him if I could invite you again, and he said yes."'
 				'"Really? You want to take me to another party?"'
 			end
 			'"Come on, it will be a lot of fun. I promise. So will you come?"'
@@ -305,7 +305,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_3.jpg"></center>'
 				'You refuse to go to the party.'
 				'"Sorry Anya. I would love to, but I can''t get behind at school. I have homework and books to read, you know what it''s like."'
-				'She smiles to you. "My nerdy little sister. Well have fun studying!"'
+				'She smiles at you. "My nerdy little sister. Well have fun studying!"'
 				act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			end
 			if razradbeg > 0:
@@ -316,7 +316,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_4.jpg"></center>'
 					'You refuse to go to the party.'
-					'"I would love to, but I have a competition to prepare for. I have to train. I could be a great athlete one day, unlike you Miss Lazy Bones." you tell her with a teasing laugh.'
+					'"I would love to, but I have a competition to prepare for. I have to train. I could be a great athlete one day, unlike you Miss Lazy Bones," you tell her with a teasing laugh.'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
 			end
@@ -327,7 +327,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/rekshome/party/sisboyqwparty_5.jpg"></center>'
 					'You refuse to go to the party.'
-					'"I can''t. The coach does not allow me to stay out late and drinking is also prohibited."'
+					'"I can''t. Coach does not allow me to stay out late, and drinking is also prohibited."'
 					act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
 			end
@@ -347,8 +347,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 		elseif (sisterQW['party'] = 1 and daystart > sisterQW['partyday'] and week > 5) or (sisterQW['party'] = 1 and daystart - sisterQW['partyday'] > 3):
 			sisterQW['party'] = 0
 			if sisterQW['rexbday'] = 1: sisterQW['rexbday'] = -1
-			'"We missed you at the party <<$pcs_nickname>>." Anya pouts at you. "I''ll let you know when the next party is and maybe you''ll be able to make it, okay?"'
-			'You apologize for missing the party and Anya smiles at you.'
+			'"We missed you at the party <<$pcs_nickname>>." Anya pouts at you. "I''ll let you know when the next party is, and maybe you''ll be able to make it, okay?"'
+			'You apologize for missing the party, and Anya smiles at you.'
 			act 'Continue': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 		!! After Roma visit
 		elseif ((sisboyday + 1 = daystart and hour > 18) or sisboyday + 1 < daystart) and sisThank = 1 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
@@ -396,8 +396,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			minut += 2
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-			'You''re both embarrassed after what happened that night, and cannot look each other in the eye. Anya eventually speaks.'
-			'"I thought you liked guys <<$pcs_nickname>>? I always found it much more pleasant to handle men." she says with a smile.'
+			'You''re both embarrassed after what happened that night and cannot look each other in the eye. Anya eventually speaks.'
+			'"I thought you liked guys <<$pcs_nickname>>? I always found it much more pleasant to handle men," she says with a smile.'
 			if sisterQW['dno'] = 0:
 				act 'I don''t know what happened':
 					sisterQW['dno'] = 1
@@ -405,7 +405,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-					'You blush at Anya. "Forgive me, I was so worked up and I just couldn''t control myself. I don''t know what came over me."'
+					'You blush at Anya. "Forgive me, I was so worked up, and I just couldn''t control myself. I don''t know what came over me."'
 					'"Well, I don''t mind if you sometimes ''lose control of yourself''. Just try and control yourself though." she smiles slyly. You smile back at her.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -418,8 +418,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-					'You blush at Anya. "I... I like girls. I''m... I''m a... lesbian. I don''t know what came over me. You are just so pretty and I was so horny..."'
-					'"Oh!" She seems a little surprised, but then smiles at you and hugs you. "As long as you are happy, then I don''t care about your sexuality. But for the record, I''m not a lesbian." she says with a laugh and then asks you about any girlfriends you have had. For someone that claims to be straight, she sure seems curious about lesbian sex.'
+					'You blush at Anya. "I... I like girls. I''m... I''m a... lesbian. I don''t know what came over me. You are just so pretty, and I was so horny..."'
+					'"Oh!" She seems a little surprised but then smiles at you and hugs you. "As long as you are happy, then I don''t care about your sexuality. But for the record, I''m not a lesbian," she says with a laugh and then asks you about any girlfriends you have had. For someone that claims to be straight, she sure seems curious about lesbian sex.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
@@ -431,8 +431,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					gs 'stat'
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
-					'You blush at Anya. "I like girls too. I''m not a lesbian, I just like both guys and girls. I don''t know what came over me that night. You are just so pretty and I was so horny..."'
-					'"Oh!" She seems a little surprised, but then smiles at you and hugs you. "As long as you are happy, then I don''t care about your sexuality. But for the record, I''m not a lesbian or into girls." she says with a laugh and then asks you about any girlfriends you have had. For someone that claims to be straight, she sure seems curious about lesbian sex.'
+					'You blush at Anya. "I like girls too. I''m not a lesbian, I just like both guys and girls. I don''t know what came over me that night. You are just so pretty, and I was so horny..."'
+					'"Oh!" She seems a little surprised but then smiles at you and hugs you. "As long as you are happy, then I don''t care about your sexuality. But for the record, I''m not a lesbian or into girls." she says with a laugh and then asks you about any girlfriends you have had. For someone that claims to be straight, she sure seems curious about lesbian sex.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 				end
@@ -445,7 +445,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_24.jpg"></center>'
 					'"Wait, you said ''more pleasant.'' Does that mean you have been with other girls before?" you ask.'
-					'Anya blushes. "Well, yes... Twice before actually. I was curious and horny." she says with a laugh when she realizes she sounds like you when you came onto her.'
+					'Anya blushes. "Well, yes... Twice before actually. I was curious and horny," she says with a laugh when she realizes she sounds like you when you came onto her.'
 					'You grin and pry. "So did you like it?"'
 					'She blushes even more. "Yeah, a little. It was fun, but I prefer guys. They are way more fun." Soon the two of you are talking about the differences in sex with guys and girls, with you adding in your own experiences along with hers.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
@@ -459,7 +459,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Anya looks at you and laughs "Well <<$pcs_nickname>>, I know what you were up to! I went into the room, and you were playing with yourself!"'
+			'Anya looks at you and laughs. "Well <<$pcs_nickname>>, I know what you were up to! I went into the room, and you were playing with yourself!"'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			exit
 		!! Anya is about to head to work
@@ -468,14 +468,14 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sobir.jpg"></center>'
 			'Your sister is busy getting ready for work.'
-			'Anya, without even turning around, says "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, no time to talk. I''m already late!"'
+			'Anya, without even turning around, says, "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, no time to talk. I''m already late!"'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		elseif anyaloc = 2 and $loc ! 'bedrPar':
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat_kitchen1.jpg"></center>'
 			'Your sister is finishing her breakfast.'
-			'Anya, without even turning around, says "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, no time to talk. I need to get ready for work!"'
+			'Anya, without even turning around, says, "Sorry <<$pcs_nickname>>, no time to talk. I need to get ready for work!"'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		!! Anya is going for a walk
 		elseif sisterdialog = 3 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
@@ -484,11 +484,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 			'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/progulka.jpg"></center>'
 			'Your sister is getting herself ready to go out. She admires herself in a mirror and wiggles her ass, trying different poses.'
-			'Anya, without even turning to look at you, says "<<$pcs_nickname>>, if you decide to take a walk, I will be near the club with my friends."'
+			'Anya, without even turning to look at you, says, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, if you decide to take a walk, I will be near the club with my friends."'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 		elseif npc_rel['A33'] < 20:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-			'You are trying to talk to your sister but she refuses to talk to you.'
+			'You try to talk to your sister, but she refuses to talk to you.'
 	!!what is this sistersorry used for? can we get rid of it and just always have the say sorry as a option?
 			if sisterQW['lowrelboost'] ! daystart:
 				act 'Apologize':
@@ -496,20 +496,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					sisterQW['lowrelboost'] = daystart
 					npc_rel['A33'] += (pcs_intel/10) + (pcs_apprnc/20)
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You apologize to your sister and it seems she forgives you somewhat.'
+					'You apologize to your sister, and it seems she forgives you somewhat.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
-		elseif npc_rel['A33'] >= 20 and npc_rel['A33'] < 40:
+		elseif npc_rel['A33'] < 40:
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-			'You are trying to talk to your sister but she just cuts you off bluntly.'
+			'You try to talk to your sister, but she just cuts you off bluntly.'
 			if sisterQW['lowrelboost'] ! daystart:
 				act 'Try to smooth your relations':
 					*clr & cla
 					sisterQW['lowrelboost'] = daystart
 					npc_rel['A33'] += (pcs_intel/10) + (pcs_apprnc/20)
 					gs 'stat'
-					'You suck up to your sister and she appears to be slowly treating you better.'
+					'You suck up to your sister, and she appears to be slowly treating you better.'
 					act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				end
 			end
@@ -525,7 +525,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						cla
 						gs 'willpower', 'pay', 'resist'
 						gs 'stat'
-						'"Nothing." you quip as you turn away so that she can''t see your pierced tongue.'
+						'"Nothing," you quip as you turn away so that she can''t see your pierced tongue.'
 						act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 					end
 				else
@@ -565,22 +565,22 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 		elseif pirsC > 0 and pirsC < 10000 and sisterQW['pirsC'] = 0 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
 			sisterQW['pirsC'] = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Your sister looks at your earrings. Reaching up to hold and inspect one closely, she says "Well, finally! I thought you would never get your ears pierced."'
+			'Your sister looks at your earrings. Reaching up to hold and inspect one closely, she says, "Well, finally! I thought you would never get your ears pierced."'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			exit
 		elseif pirsD > 0 and pirsD < 10000 and sisterQW['pirsD'] = 0 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
 			sisterQW['pirsD'] = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Anya is clearly shocked by your nose ring: "Damn <<$pcs_nickname>>, tell me who did this to you and I''ll get them for you."'
-			'She dances around you, shadow boxing and you both end up laughing loudly.'
+			'Anya is clearly shocked by your nose ring. "Damn <<$pcs_nickname>>, tell me who did this to you and I''ll get them for you."'
+			'She dances around you shadow boxing, and you both end up laughing loudly.'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			exit
 		elseif pirsE > 0 and pirsE < 10000 and sisterQW['pirsE'] = 0 and $loc = 'bedrPar':
 			sisterQW['pirsE'] = 1
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-			'Your sister takes a good look at your eyebrow piercing and says "Nice, but be careful and don''t accidentally get it caught on something!"'
+			'Your sister takes a good look at your eyebrow piercing and says, "Nice, but be careful and don''t accidentally get it caught on something!"'
 			act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 			act 'Chat': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 			exit
@@ -617,36 +617,36 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
 				end
 				if temp = 1:
-					'As you chat with your sister, she says it is possible to rent an apartment in the city and live and work there, but she is happy living in Pavlovsk. Even she helps pay the bills, she has way more money to spend on herself this way.'	
+					'As you chat with your sister, she says it is possible to rent an apartment in the city and live and work there, but she is happy living in Pavlovsk. Even helping pay the bills, she has way more money to spend on herself this way.'	
 				elseif temp = 2:
 					'You chat with your sister. She tells you the tailor at the garment factory is a creep who makes his customers wait around in their underwear. At least the pretty girls that is.'
 				elseif temp = 3:
-					'You ask Anya about the University and she grins. "I almost went, passed the entrance exam. However, I started working in the summer and got used to having cash. What can I buy with a diploma?"'
+					'You ask Anya about the University, and she grins. "I almost went, passed the entrance exam. However, I started working in the summer and got used to having cash. What can I buy with a diploma?"'
 				elseif temp = 4:
-					'You ask Anya about her boyfriend and she smiles. "Well, I have a boyfriend, but it''s nothing serious. It''s more like friends with benefits."'
+					'You ask Anya about her boyfriend, and she smiles. "Well, I have a boyfriend, but it''s nothing serious. It''s more like friends with benefits."'
 				elseif temp = 5:
-					'You start talking with Anya and she tells you about the boys she has met, the parties she''s been to and cosmetics.'
+					'You start talking with Anya, and she tells you about the boys she has met, the parties she''s been to and cosmetics.'
 				elseif temp = 6:
-					'You chat with your sister and she tells you about the new dress she brought at the store today.'
+					'You chat with your sister, and she tells you about the new dress she bought at the store today.'
 				elseif temp = 7:
 					'You chat with your sister about movie stars, discussing and sharing fantasies about them, and arguing about which ones are sexier.'
 				elseif temp = 8:
-					'Anna talks about sports clubs in the community center, and how sport is very good for the figure, but she is too lazy to go there.'
+					'Anna talks about sports clubs in the community center and how sport is very good for the figure but she is too lazy to go there.'
 				elseif temp = 9:
-					'Anya says that one of her friends had a kid, but the father denied it and she was left looking after her kid alone. She says that if you are smart, you will buy the pill from the pharmacy.'
+					'Anya says that one of her friends had a kid but the father denied it and she was left looking after her kid alone. She says that, if you are smart, you will buy the pill from the pharmacy.'
 				elseif temp = 10:
 					'Anya talks about the one winter where she went out without a coat and caught a bad cold. You remind her that she spent the whole time complaining about it to you.'
 				elseif temp = 11:
 					'You chat with your sister, discussing the latest fashion trends.'
 				elseif temp = 12:
-					'Anya tells you how she used to try various fad diets to make herself beautiful. However she ended up underweight, her skin looked gaunt and she kept getting acne. Since quitting the diets, she is much healthier and looks more beautiful every day.'
+					'Anya tells you how she used to try various fad diets to make herself beautiful. However, she ended up underweight, her skin looked gaunt and she kept getting acne. Since quitting the diets, she is much healthier and looks more beautiful every day.'
 					'The last part has you both laughing.'
 				elseif temp = 13:
-					'You chat with your sister and she tells you that you can find a lot of interesting bargains if you wander through the market.'
+					'You chat with your sister, and she tells you that you can find a lot of interesting bargains if you wander through the market.'
 				elseif temp = 14:
-					'You chat with your sister and she tells you about one of her weird ex-boyfriends who was always so poetically dramatic. In particular, she tells you about how he broke up with her. "He said: Anya my love, I so deeply cherish you, but we are not meant to be. Like water and oil, no matter how hard we try, we cannot be together!"'
+					'You chat with your sister, and she tells you about one of her weird ex-boyfriends who was always so poetically dramatic. In particular, she tells you about how he broke up with her. "He said, Anya my love, I so deeply cherish you, but we are not meant to be. Like water and oil, no matter how hard we try, we cannot be together!"'
 				else
-					'You chat with your sister and she asks you how you feel about women''s sexual rights. You spend some time having a very frank and quite revealing conversation.'
+					'You chat with your sister, and she asks you how you feel about women''s sexual rights. You spend some time having a very frank and quite revealing conversation.'
 				end
 				act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 				act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -662,16 +662,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						'Your sister boasts to you about how good her boyfriend is in bed. She goes into a surprising amount of detail.'
 					elseif temp = 2:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister2.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister tells you a story about her and her friend sucking off her other friend on his birthday. Afterwards, he came on both their faces and they licked his cum off of each other.'
+						'Your sister tells you a story about her and her friend sucking off her other friend on his birthday. Afterwards, he came on both their faces, and they licked his cum off of each other.'
 					elseif temp = 3:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister3.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister reveals to you that she just loves it in the ass. With mother having her innocence checked all the time, she wanted to have sex and so decided to try anal. It hurt the first couple of times, but after that she loved it. Once she lost her virginity she found she liked vaginal sex more, but still does anal. She suggests that you try it or just stick to blowjobs to keep mom from finding out you''re sexualy active.'
+						'Your sister reveals to you that she just loves it in the ass. With mother having her innocence checked all the time, she wanted to have sex and so decided to try anal. It hurt the first couple of times, but after that she loved it. Once she lost her virginity, she found she liked vaginal sex more, but still does anal. She suggests that you try it or just stick to blowjobs to keep mom from finding out you''re sexually active.'
 					elseif temp = 4:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister4.jpg"></center>'
 						'Your sister tells you about how she gave her boyfriend a blowjob and swallowed his load without slowing down. "Oh, you should have seen his face!"'
 					elseif temp = 5:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister5.jpg"></center>'
-						'Your sister tells you about how, when she was in school, she would to go to a classmate''s apartment to study and afterwards, he would fuck her ass.'
+						'Your sister tells you about how, when she was in school, she would go to a classmate''s apartment to study and afterwards he would fuck her ass.'
 					elseif temp = 6:
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sex/sister6.jpg"></center>'
 						'Your sister reveals to you that she just loves it when a guy takes over, grabs her by the head and just fucks her mouth hard.'
@@ -696,7 +696,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
 							'You grin at that imagery as well. "God yes I would like to as well. There is a boy in my school from America. He is tall, well built and as dark skinned as I have ever seen."'
 							'She laughs. "Well why don''t you hit on him then? I am sure he would be eager to show you what it is like."'
-							'You laugh and the two of you talk about what it would be like and why it is taboo.'
+							'You laugh, and the two of you talk about what it would be like and why it is taboo.'
 							act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 							act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						end
@@ -712,7 +712,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 										OluQW['anya_inv'] = 1
 										'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
 										'"Would you like to come up with me next time I visit him?" you ask.'
-										'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it." she says while blushing.'
+										'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it," she says while blushing.'
 										'You promise to text her next time you are going up there and let him know she is willing to help with his needs too. "OK, next time I am going up there I will let you know and tell him."'
 										act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 										act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -729,8 +729,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								act 'Ask if she wants a turn':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
-									'"Maybe I could invite him over one evening and you can give him a go? Interested?" you ask.'
-									'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it." she says while blushing.'
+									'"Maybe I could invite him over one evening, and you can give him a go? Interested?" you ask.'
+									'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it," she says while blushing.'
 									'"OK, I will talk to him about it and let you know."'
 									act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 									act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -747,7 +747,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 									*clr & cla
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
 									'"Would you like to come up with me next time I go?" you ask.'
-									'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it." she says while blushing.'
+									'She thinks about it for a moment, then grins and nods. "Yes I think I would. You know, just to try it," she says while blushing.'
 									'"OK, next time I am going to the city to see them, I will let you know."'
 									act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 									act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
@@ -766,19 +766,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						*clr & cla
 						'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sister_chat.jpg"></center>'
 						if hour > 6 and hour < 23:
-							'You crawl over her bed towards her to kiss her and when she realizes what you are about to do, she pulls back from you. "What are you doing? Everyone is still up. What if someone walked in?" She shakes her head. "You really need to control yourself little sister." She makes it clear nothing is going to happen.'
+							'You crawl over her bed towards her to kiss her, but when she realizes what you are about to do, she pulls back from you. "What are you doing? Everyone is still up. What if someone walked in?" She shakes her head. "You really need to control yourself little sister." She makes it clear nothing is going to happen.'
 							act 'Move away': gt $loc, $loc_arg
 							act 'Keep talking': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						else
-							'You lean in and give her a quick but passionate kiss on the lips. She stiffens a bit at first, obviously unsure but then returns the kiss. Once you break the kiss, she says "You''re a horny little thing aren''t you?"'
+							'You lean in and give her a quick but passionate kiss on the lips. She stiffens a bit at first, obviously unsure, but then returns the kiss. Once you break the kiss, she says, "You''re a horny little thing aren''t you?"'
 							'You grin at her. "Come on, it will be fun."'
 							gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 3, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 							gs 'stat'
 							if rand(1,3) = 1:
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-								'Anya says "Again? You know I enjoy this, but I''m not a lesbian and we should only do it... occasionally... okay?"'
-								'You give her another short kiss, then gently caress her. "You know you want to, come on." you whisper to her seductively.'
+								'Anya says, "Again? You know I enjoy this, but I''m not a lesbian, and we should only do it... occasionally... okay?"'
+								'You give her another short kiss, then gently caress her. "You know you want to, come on," you whisper to her seductively.'
 								'She kisses you back as her answer.'
 								gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 1, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -786,8 +786,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							else
 								*clr & cla
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-								'Anya says "Again? You know I enjoy this, but we should only do it... occasionally... okay?"'
-								'She gives you another short kiss, then gently pushes you away. "Not tonight. Let''s both get some sleep and not wear outselves out, huh?"'
+								'Anya says, "Again? You know I enjoy this, but we should only do it... occasionally... okay?"'
+								'She gives you another short kiss, then gently pushes you away. "Not tonight. Let''s both get some sleep and not wear ourselves out, huh?"'
 								gs 'arousal', 'kiss', 1, 'incest', 'lesbian'
 								gs 'arousal', 'end'
 								gs 'stat'
@@ -810,7 +810,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 						'You ask Anya about her boyfriend and she smiles.'
 						'"Well, I have a boyfriend, but it''s nothing serious. He is more of a friend who I have sex with."'
 						'"Awesome. Now that I think about it, you have to introduce me to him!"'
-						'"We hang out in the evenings at the community center. Meet me there and I''ll introduce you to him."'
+						'"We hang out in the evenings at the community center. Meet me there, and I''ll introduce you to him."'
 						act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 					end
 				elseif npc_QW['A33'] >= 2 and npc_rel['A33'] >= 40 and sisboytrioQW > -1 and sisboytrioDayOtkaz <= daystart and sisboypartyQW < 2:
@@ -823,7 +823,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_09.jpg"></center>'
 							sisboyday = daystart
 							if rand(0,3) = 1:
-								'"Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>! Well, did you like it last time? We had a very good time with Roma."'
+								'"Hello <<$pcs_nickname>>! Well, Roma and I were wondering, did you like it last time? We had a very good time."'
 								'You don''t say anything and just smile slyly, watching your sister''s eyes.'
 								'"We want to repeat our game tomorrow evening, if you would like to."'
 								act 'I would love to, but can we postpone it?':
@@ -835,8 +835,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 									'"Oh, sis! I would be glad to join you, but tomorrow evening isn''t a good time! Could we do it some other day?"'
 									'She looks kind of dejected, so you continue to talk to her.'
 									'"Really Anya, I am glad you asked. I do want to have fun with both of you, but tomorrow really isn''t a good time."'
-									'Finally, she realizes that you didn''t reject her idea and that the timing is simply a little off. She smiles at you and then kisses your lips.'
-									'"Then later it is, little sis." she says.'
+									'Finally, she realizes that you didn''t reject her idea and that the timing really is simply a little off. She smiles at you and then kisses your lips.'
+									'"Then later it is, little sis," she says.'
 									act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 								end
 								act 'Agree':
@@ -854,7 +854,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							else
 								'"The last time Roma was here was so good! Thank you very much."'
 								'"You''re welcome, I''m always very happy to help my sister and to see her happy."'
-								'"He would like to come here again tomorrow. Do you mind taking another walk for about an hour?"'
+								'"He would like to come here again tomorrow. Could you take another walk for about an hour?"'
 								gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'easy'
 								if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
 									act 'No (<<will_cost>> Willpower)':
@@ -882,7 +882,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 									'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_03.jpg"></center>'
 									*nl
 									'"Fine, I''ll ''go for a walk.'' Just don''t be too loud. If Kolka hears you, it will blow his tiny little mind."'
-									'You and Anya laugh and she joyfully hugs you saying "You''re the best!"'
+									'You and Anya laugh, and she joyfully hugs you, saying, "You''re the best!"'
 									act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 								end
 							end
@@ -896,7 +896,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								'"Well, don''t just leave me hanging. What is it that you want to say to me?"'
 								'"Well, hmmm... We want you to err... join us tomorrow evening."'
 							else
-								'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! Well, did you like it last time? We had a very good time with Roma."'
+								'"Hey <<$pcs_nickname>>! Well, Roma and I were wondering, did you like it last time? We had a very good time."'
 								'You do not say anything and just smile slyly, watching your sister''s eyes.'
 								'"We want to repeat our game tomorrow evening, if you would like to."'
 							end
@@ -910,7 +910,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/mikhail/terminal/sisboyqw_37.jpg"></center>'
 								'You decline your sister''s indecent proposal.'
 								'"No, you pervert!"'
-								'You argue with your sister and when you have both shouted yourselves out and tears roll down your cheeks, she turns away from you and doesn''t want to talk any more."'
+								'You argue with your sister, and when you have both shouted yourselves out and tears roll down your cheeks, she turns away from you and doesn''t want to talk any more."'
 								act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 							end
 							act 'I would love to, but can we postpone it?':
@@ -922,8 +922,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								'"Oh, sis! I would be glad to join you, but tomorrow evening isn''t a good time! Could we do it some other day?"'
 							    'She looks kind of dejected, so you continue to talk to her.'
 								'"Really Anya, I am glad you asked. I do want to have fun with both of you, but tomorrow really isn''t a good time."'
-								'Finally, she realizes that you didn''t reject her idea and that the timing is simply a little off. She smiles at you and then kisses your lips.'
-								'"Then later it is, little sis." she says.'
+								'Finally, she realizes that you didn''t reject her idea and that the timing really is simply a little off. She smiles at you and then kisses your lips.'
+								'"Then later it is, little sis," she says.'
 								act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 							end
 							act 'Agree':
@@ -945,14 +945,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							if sisterQW['romatime'] = 0:
 								sisterQW['romatime'] = 1
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_01.jpg"></center>'
-								'Anya takes a long and hesitant look at you, and eventually decides to ask you.'
-								'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, could you spend an hour tomorrow after 18:00 going for a walk or something? Roma wants to visit me here and... well, you know what I mean."'
+								'Anya takes a long and hesitant look at you and eventually asks you, "<<$pcs_nickname>>, could you spend an hour tomorrow after 18:00 going for a walk or something? Roma wants to visit me here and... well, you know what I mean."'
 								'Your sister is blushing a little and looks at you with pleading eyes.'
 							else
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_09.jpg"></center>'
 								'"The last time Roma was here was so good! Thank you for giving us some space, <<$pcs_nickname>>."'
 								'"You''re welcome, I''m always very happy to help my sister and to see her happy."'
-								'"He would like to come here again tomorrow, do you mind taking another walk for about an hour?"'
+								'"He would like to come here again tomorrow, could you take another walk for about an hour?"'
 							end
 							gs 'willpower', 'misc', 'resist', 'easy'
 							if will_cost <= pcs_willpwr:
@@ -981,20 +980,20 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								'<center><h1><font color="maroon">Anya</font></h1></center>'
 								'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_03.jpg"></center>'
 								'"Fine, I''ll ''go for a walk.'' Just don''t be too loud. If Kolka hears you, it will blow his tiny little mind."'
-								'You and Anya laugh and she joyfully hugs you saying "You''re the best!"'
+								'You and Anya laugh, and she joyfully hugs you, saying, "You''re the best!"'
 								act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 							end
 						elseif temp = 4:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'You ask your sister about Roma and she happily talks about him, saying how he is good, responsive and courageous.'
+							'You ask your sister about Roma, and she happily talks about him, saying how he is good, responsive and courageous.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 5:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya says that before she met Roma, he was with a mean girl and after ignoring her for a long time, he called her, making Anya jealous, so she scolded him.'
+							'Anya says that, before she met Roma, he was with a mean girl and, after ignoring her for a long time, he called her, making Anya jealous, so she scolded him.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 6:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
@@ -1012,7 +1011,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya says Roma offered her a threesome with another girl, which she was most offended by and didn''t speak to him for a week afterwards. She admits she was tempted to try it, but it was the way he asked that bothered her.'
+							'Anya says Roma offered her a threesome with another girl, which she was most offended by. She didn''t speak to him for a week afterwards. She admits she was tempted to try it, but it was the way he asked that bothered her.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 9:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
@@ -1024,7 +1023,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
 							gs 'stat'
 							'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/home/sisboyqw_05.jpg"></center>'
-							'Anya, in detail and with great enthusiasm, tells you about Roma''s magnificent virility and how if not for this, they would have long since parted.'
+							'Anya, in detail and with great enthusiasm, tells you about Roma''s magnificent virility and how, if not for this, they would have long since parted.'
 							act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 						elseif temp = 11:
 							npc_rel['A33'] += 1
@@ -1050,9 +1049,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								rexCar = 0
 								'Anya talks for a long time about her and Roma''s friends and asks you if you want to get to know any of them.'
 								'"Well, Rex sounds quite nice... I guess."'
-								'Anya smiles. "Hmm... He is a nice guy, but sometimes behaves a bit strange. He is obsessed with women''s legs."'
-								'"There was the time he was driving his father''s car without a license and gazing at a girl walking on the sidewalk, who was wearing stockings and a short skirt. As you can imagine, he got so carried away that he didn''t notice a van ahead sitting at the traffic lights."'
-								'"He drove straight into it and totalled the car! That''s why we call him Rex, because he stares at legs with his mouth open, teeth on show, wanting to devour them." As she says this, Anya is holding her hands out like claws and impersonating a T-Rex growling at your legs.'
+								'Anya smiles. "Hmm... He is a nice guy but sometimes behaves a bit strange. He is obsessed with women''s legs."'
+								'"There was the time he was driving his father''s car without a license and gazing at a girl walking on the sidewalk who was wearing stockings and a short skirt. As you can imagine, he got so carried away that he didn''t notice a van ahead sitting at the traffic lights."'
+								'"He drove straight into it and totalled the car! That''s why we call him Rex, because he stares at legs with his mouth open, teeth on show, wanting to devour them." As she says this, Anya holds her hands out like claws and impersonates a T-Rex growling at your legs.'
 							else
 								'You ask your sister about Roma and she happily talks about him, saying how he is good, responsive and courageous.'
 							end
@@ -1078,7 +1077,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 								if TwinQW < 3:
 									if TwinQW = 1:
 										'"Sis, I have a confession to make.... I have been selling my body in the Pavlovsk hotel." You wince inwardly as the admission leaves your mouth, worried what your sister will think.'
-										'Your sister''s face turns to shock and she shakes her head. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, really? Why would you do something like that? If people find out you''ll be ruined! I know I sleep around, but there''s a big difference between being a slut and being a whore."'
+										'Your sister''s face turns to shock, and she shakes her head. "<<$pcs_nickname>>, really? Why would you do something like that? If people find out, you''ll be ruined! I know I sleep around, but there''s a big difference between being a slut and being a whore."'
 										'You roll your eyes at her. "Please. That''s just <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> talking. If you''re going to sleep around, you might as well get paid for it while you''re still hot! Besides, nobody will find out, there is a guy there who takes care of everything. And look at all the money I have been making!"'
 										'You open your wallet and show your sister all the cash you have on you, <<money>> <b>₽</b>.'
 									else
@@ -1093,9 +1092,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sister_chat':
 										'You lower your head in shame and walk away from your sibling. You didn''t even get the chance to bring up the twin request. It looks like you''ll have to convince your sister that the work you do is worth the risks.'
 										TwinQW = 2
 									else
-										'"Ok, I must admit, that looks like a lot. Do you know how many hours I''d have to work in the supermarket to earn this kind of money? Still, it seems very risky to me." Your sister says.' 
-										'She''s still trying to sound responsible, but you can practically see her salivating at the sight of cold, hard, cash.'
-										'"How would you like to earn some of this and spend some time with your favorite sister at the same time?" You ask, raising your eyebrows playfully while waving the money back and forth.'
+										'"Ok, I must admit, that looks like a lot. Do you know how many hours I''d have to work in the supermarket to earn this kind of money? Still, it seems very risky to me," your sister says.' 
+										'She''s still trying to sound responsible, but you can practically see her salivating at the sight of cold, hard cash.'
+										'"How would you like to earn some of this and spend some time with your favorite sister at the same time?" you ask, raising your eyebrows playfully while waving the money back and forth.'
 										'"What do you mean, <<$pcs_nickname>>?" Anya asks, finally dropping any act of disapproval.'
 										'You explain the twins request to your sister.'
 										if sisboyparty = 0:
@@ -1158,9 +1157,9 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twincompare':
 		'<font color=#008000>Your hair is the correct length</font>'
 		tmp_twinsiscompare +=1
 	elseif pcs_hairlng <= 160:
-		'<font color=#FF0000>Your hair is to short.</font>'
+		'<font color=#FF0000>Your hair is too short.</font>'
 	else
-		'<font color=#FF0000>Your hair is to long.</font>'
+		'<font color=#FF0000>Your hair is too long.</font>'
 	end
 	if pcs_hairbsh = 0:
 		'<font color=#FF0000>You need to brush your hair.</font>'
@@ -1186,10 +1185,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twincompare':
 		'<font color=#FF0000>Your looks are too different from your sister''s. You are at <<pcs_apprnc>>. You need a score between 60 and 120 </font>'
 	end
 	if pcs_makeup = 4:
-		'<font color=#008000>Your make up hides the last differences between you and your sister.</font>'
+		'<font color=#008000>Your makeup hides the last differences between you and your sister.</font>'
 		tmp_twinsiscompare +=1
 	else
-		'<font color=#FF0000>You need some more make up to make you look more like your sister.</font>'
+		'<font color=#FF0000>You need some more makeup to make you look more like your sister.</font>'
 	end
 	act 'Finish': gt 'sister_chat', 'sister_chat'
 	if tmp_twinsiscompare >= 6:
@@ -1198,7 +1197,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'twincompare':
 				gt 'HotelHole','Twins'
 			else
 				delact 'Go to the hotel and have some twin fun'
-				'Pavlin is usually in the hotel lobby between 12:00 and 20:00, No reason to go now.'
+				'Pavlin is usually in the hotel lobby between 12:00 and 20:00. No reason to go now.'
 			end
 		end
 	end
@@ -1212,7 +1211,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'pargone':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/resident/anya/sister2.jpg"></center>'
 	*nl
 	'"<<$pcs_nickname>>, you have to get rid of your bird. Have you heard what he has been saying lately? If <<$npc_nickname[''A29'']>> ever heard this, she would kick us both out of the house!"'
-	'You have become quite attached to your bird and don''t really want to get rid of him. " Wait, there must be another solution. Give me a few days. I will go to the pet store and ask if they have a remedy for this."'
+	'You have become quite attached to your bird and don''t really want to get rid of him. "Wait, there must be another solution. Give me a few days. I will go to the pet store and ask if they have a remedy for this."'
 	if npc_rel['A33'] > 75:
 		'"Fine, you have 3 days. If there is no solution by then, I will release him myself!"'
 		'"Thanks sis. Don''t worry, I will find something."'