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locations/albina_chat.qsrc

@@ -661,7 +661,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'bj_fav':
 		act 'I do it for my boyfriend':
 			cla & *nl
 			'"I like making my boyfriend feel good," you smile. "He likes it, so I like it."'
-			'"Oh puh-leez," Albina rolls her eyes. "If I knew you were going to talk about romantic bullshit like that, I woudln''t have asked. Romance is for old decrepit fucks."'
+			'"Oh puh-leez," Albina rolls her eyes. "If I knew you were going to talk about romantic bullshit like that, I wouldn''t have asked. Romance is for decrepit old fucks."'
 			'Her words come across sharp, but you can see the twinkle in her eye that lets you know she''s just kidding.'
 			'"But seriously. Don''t you ever get tired of swallowing?"'
 			gs 'albina_chat','spit_or_swallow'

locations/anushkachat.qsrc

@@ -527,13 +527,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'chat':
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/bedroomtalk.jpg"></center>'
 			if artemQW['nush3some'] = 0:
 				artemQW['nush3some'] = 1
-				'You glance over to her. "Well, I talked to Artem about a threesome and... he''s up for it."'
-				'Anushka giggles. "Of course he is. Boys are so predictable." You briefly consider telling her how the conversation really went, but decide against it. She might tease Artem about it and you would like your boyfriend and friend get along. Instead you just agree and the two of you start talking about possible days and times you can do it.'
+				'You glance over at her. "I talked to Artem about a threesome and... he''s up for it."'
+				'Anushka giggles. "Of course he is. Boys are so predictable." You briefly consider telling her how the conversation really went, but decide against it. She might tease Artem about it and you would like your boyfriend and friend get along, so you just agree with her and the two of you start talking about possible days and times.'
 			else
-				'You glance over to her. "I have been thinking, are you sure you are up for a threesome with Artem?"'
-				'Anushka give you a puzzled look. "Are you changing your mind or something?"'
-				'You shaked your head no. "No, just making sure you havn''t is all."'
-				'She gives you a strange look and shakes her head slightly no. "No, just call me when you guys want too and if I''m not busy I will swing by." You briefly consider telling her how the conversation really went, but decide against it. She might tease Artem about it and you would like your boyfriend and friend get along. Instead you just agree and the two of you start talking about possible days and times you can do it.'
+				'You glance over at her. "I''ve been thinking. Are you sure you''re up for a threesome with Artem?"'
+				'She give you a puzzled stare. "Are you changing your mind or something?"'
+				'You shake your head. "No, just making sure you haven''t is all."'
+				'She gives you a strange look and shakes her head slightly. "Whatever. Just call me when you guys want to do it and I''ll swing by if I''m not busy." You briefly consider telling her how the conversation really went, but decide against it. She might tease Artem about it and you would like your boyfriend and friend get along, so you just agree with her and the two of you start talking about possible days and times.'
 			end
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'anush_bedroom','anushroom'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'anushkachat', 'chat'
@@ -549,15 +549,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'photo_chat':
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/anushka/bedroom/bedroomtalk.jpg"></center>'
 	'You climb off the bed and grab your camera from your purse. "Hey, do you mind if I take your photo for my portfolio?" you ask.'
 	'She grins and lies back, stretching in a suggestive way. "You want me to model for you?"'
-	'You can''t help but grin at her antics. "Yes, will you model or me? I need the practice and I think you would make a great model."'
+	'You can''t help but grin at her antics. "Yes. I need the practice and I think you would make a great model."'
 	'She giggles. "Sure, but only if you send me copies for my modelling portfolio."'
 	if anushkaQW['model'] >= 1:
 		'You nod. "Deal."'
 	else
 		anushkaQW['model'] = 1
-		'You do a bit of a double take. "Wait what? Your modelling portfolio?"'
-		'She giggles at your reaction. "Yeah, I model at the Aphrodite Photography Agency, in the city."'
-		'You''re a little surprised, not that she models, but that you hadn''t heard about it yet. "Oh. Uh yeah, sure I can do that."'
+		'You do a bit of a double take. "Wait, what? Your modelling portfolio?"'
+		'She giggles at your reaction. "Yeah, I model at a place called Aphrodite in the city."'
+		'You''re a little surprised that you hadn''t heard about this until now. "Oh. Uh yeah, sure I can do that."'
 	end
 	act 'Take out your camera':
 		cla & *clr

locations/soniahome.qsrc

@@ -42,18 +42,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'home':
 		if soniaPS > 0:
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/tkachenko.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stand outside the Ivanko household, knocking on the door. It''s quickly answered by Sonia''s mother, who has an unfriendly, serious look on her face. "Sonia is doesn''t want to see anyone, so stop bothering her." she says before closing the door, not inviting you in.'
+			'You stand outside the Ivanko household, knocking on the door. It''s quickly answered by Sonia''s mother, who has an unfriendly, serious look on her face. "Sonia doesn''t want to see anyone, so stop bothering her!" she says before closing the door in your face.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'pav_residential'
 		elseif rand(0,3) = 0:
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/tkachenko.jpg"></center>'
-			'You stand outside the Ivanko household, knocking on the door. It''s quickly answered by Sonia''s mother, who has an unfriendly, serious look on her face. "Sonia is not here, but she should be home later. You can call her then," she says before politely closing the door, not inviting you in.'
+			'You stand outside the Ivanko household, knocking on the door. It''s quickly answered by Sonia''s mother, who has an unfriendly, serious look on her face. "Sonia isn''t here, but she should be home later. You can call her then," she says before politely closing the door, not inviting you in.'
 			act 'Leave': gt 'pav_residential'
 		elseif rand(0,2) = 0:
 			*clr & cla
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/tkachenko.jpg"></center>'
 			if soniaQW['tkachenko'] = 0:
-				'You stand outside the Ivanko household, knocking on the door. It''s quickly answered by Sonia''s mother, who has an unfriendly, serious look on her face. "Hello, can I help you?" she asks.'
+				'You stand outside the Ivanko household, knocking on the door. It''s quickly answered by Sonia''s mother, who has an unfriendly, serious look on her face. "Hello. Can I help you?" she asks.'
 				'You smile at her. "Hi, I''m <<$pcs_nickname>>, one of Sonia''s classmates. Is she here?"'
 				'She frowns at you. It seems she doesn''t care for your casual attitude. "I am Tkachenko Ivanko, but you can call me Mrs Ivanko. Who are you exactly?"'
 				'You keep your smile. "Sorry, Mrs Ivanko. I''m <<$pcs_firstname>> <<$pcs_lastname>>."'
@@ -61,7 +61,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'home':
 				act 'Enter': gt 'soniahome','hallway'
 			else
 				'You stand outside the Ivanko household, knocking on the door. It''s quickly answered by Sonia''s mother, who has an unfriendly, serious look on her face. "Hello again, <<$pcs_firstname>>. Sonia is in her room."'
-				'"Thank you, Mrs Ivanko," you politely reply to keep her happy, and she lets you in, closing the door behind you.'
+				'"Thank you, Mrs Ivanko," you politely reply to keep her happy, and she lets you in before closing the door behind you.'
 				soniaQW['tkachenko'] = 1
 				act 'Enter': gt 'soniahome','hallway'
 			end
@@ -348,7 +348,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'soniaparents':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Sonia''s parent''s room</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/parents_bedroom.jpg"></center>'
-	'You look into Sonia''s parents'' bedroom and see that, as with the rest of the house, it''s spotless, tidy, and tastefully decorated, making the most of the available space. There''s a wardrobe to your right and the bed on the left, with a chest of drawers and a beautiful fireplace.'
+	'You look into Sonia''s parents'' bedroom and see that, as with the rest of the house, it''s spotless, tidy and tastefully decorated, making the most of the available space. There''s a wardrobe to your right and the bed on the left, with a chest of drawers and a beautiful fireplace.'
 	if hour < 6:
 		gt 'soniahome', 'timecheck'
 	elseif hour > 22:
@@ -404,7 +404,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_room':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color = maroon>Vitek''s bedroom</font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_room.jpg"></center>'
-	'The first thing you notice about her room is it is spotless and orderly. Nothing is out of place in the room. There is a dresser against one wall with several things neatly placed on it, with pictures on the wall above it. The bed is near the centre of the room against one wall, and the bed is made with a body pillow leaning against the other pillows. Above the bed is a short string of lights. Along one of the other walls is a small makeup table that is clean, with all the makeup visibly lined up in a very orderly fashion.'
+	'The first thing you notice about her room is that it''s spotless and orderly. Nothing is out of place. There is a dresser against one wall with several things neatly placed on it, with pictures on the wall above it. The bed is near the centre of the room against one wall, and the bed is made with a body pillow leaning against the other pillows. Above the bed is a short string of lights, while a small makeup table with all the makeup lined up in a very orderly fashion sits against another wall.'
 	'<a href="exec:gt ''soniahome'', ''sonia_chat''">Sonia</a> is lying on her bed relaxing.'
 	act 'Go to the hallway':gt 'soniahome','hallway'
 	if $clothingworntype = 'nude': act 'Dress yourself': gs 'shortgs' ,'dress' & gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_room'
@@ -426,7 +426,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-	'You sit on the bed next to Sonia and look around her room as she starts chatting about something she recently read in a magazine.'
+	'You sit on the bed next to Sonia and look around her room as she starts chatting about something she recently read about in a magazine.'
 	act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 	act 'Make small talk':
 		*clr & cla
@@ -467,8 +467,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 		minut += 15
 		'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-		'You know she often has older clothes, but she some how always manages to make them work and look stylish. "Hey how do you manage to always look so nice?"'
-		'She smiles. "You mean for someone that often has older or cheaper clothes?" You start to protest you didn''t mean it that way but she stops you. "I learned to sew, at first just to fix tears and later alter clothes so they fit better and look nicer. You would be surprised what you can do with a little effort." Then she talks about how she goes about turning fairly plain looking clothes into stylish clothes.'
+		'She often wears older clothes, but she somehow always manages to make them work and look stylish. "How do you manage to always look so nice?"'
+		'She smiles. "You mean for someone that has cheaper clothes?" You''re about to protest that you didn''t mean it that way when she stops you. "I learned to sew. At first, it was just to fix tears and later alter clothes so they fit better and look nicer. You would be surprised what you can do with a little effort." She goes on to talk about how she goes about turning fairly plain looking clothes into stylish ones.'
 		act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 		act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 		end
@@ -479,10 +479,10 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 			minut += 5
 			'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-			'"Whats going on with you and the gopniks?" you ask.'
-			'"I am just tired of being the good girl, I just want to cut lose, get a little wild and have some fun. What''s wrong with that?" She replies.'
-			'You sit there in silence a moment wonder if you should push things. "Yeah but you can''t really trust those guys." you meekly reply.'
-			'She rolls her eyes. "I can take care of myself, just let me have my fun." You are about to say more but you can tell this will only lead to a argument so you let it drop.'
+			'"What''s going on with you and the gopniks?" you ask.'
+			'"I''m just tired of being the good girl. I want to cut loose, get a little wild and have some fun. What''s wrong with that?" she replies.'
+			'You sit in silence, wondering if you should push things. "Yeah, but you can''t really trust those guys," you meekly reply.'
+			'She rolls her eyes. "I can take care of myself. Just let me have my fun." You''re about to say something, but you can tell it will only cause an argument and decide to drop it.'
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 		end
@@ -493,8 +493,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 			minut += 5
 			'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-			'"So I meet your brother." You state matter of factly.'
-			'"Oh god, don''t fall for anything he says. He is a total horn dog, I can''t count the number of girl friends he has had. He just uses them and tosses them aside, yet they keep coming back to him. Do your self a favor and stay away from him." She says in all seriousness. You just nod in response to that, not sure what you could possible say back to her, but you do wonder. Can he really be that bad?'
+			'"So. I met your brother," you state matter of factly.'
+			'"Oh god, don''t fall for anything he says. He''s a total horn dog to the point I can''t count the number of ''girlfriends'' he''s had. He just uses them for sex and tosses them aside, yet they keep coming back to him. Do yourself a favor and stay away from him," she says in a serious tone. You just nod in response, not sure what you could possibly say back to her.'
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 		end
@@ -504,16 +504,16 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 		minut += 5
 		'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-		'"What is your plans after school?" you ask.'
-		'She looks at you smiling. "I''ve got good grades more than enough to get into the University in Saint Petersburg. I am planning to attend the University after school and study fashion design. My parents want me to become a Doctor or a Lawyer or get a business degree or something like that."'
-		'Before you can say something she asks you "What about you? What are your plans for the future?"'
+		'"What are your plans for after school?" you ask.'
+		'She looks at you with a smile. "I''ve got good grades, more than enough to get into the university in Saint Petersburg. I''m planning to enrol there after school and study fashion design, but my parents want me to become a doctor or a lawyer or get a business degree or something like that."'
+		'Before you can say anything, she turns to you. "What about you? What are your plans for the future?"'
 		act 'I don''t know':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-			'"I''m not sure, but I guess I have a few options." you tell her.'
-			'She nods a bit. "Oh well I guess you still have some time left to make up your mind." She says but sounds a little unsure like she doesn''t believe it herself.'
+			'"I''m not sure, but I guess I have a few options," you tell her.'
+			'She nods. "Oh. Well, I guess you still have some time left to make up your mind..." she says. She sounds unsure though, as if she doesn''t believe it herself.'
 			'You''re not sure what more to say about it, so you decide to change the subject.'
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
@@ -523,8 +523,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 			minut += 5
 			'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-			'You get a bit excited. "I am planning to attend the University too. For sure now, I will know someone there."'
-			'She grins at that happily. "Maybe we should think about being roommates when we go. As you said, then we would know someone and we already get along. Let''s talk about it some more when the time comes to decide then."'
+			'You get a little excited. "I''m planning to attend the university too. At least now I''ll know someone there."'
+			'She grins happily. "Maybe we should think about being roommates when we go? As you said, then we would know someone and we already get along. Let''s talk about it some more when the time comes."'
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 		end
@@ -549,8 +549,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 				'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 				'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
 				'You sigh in a way only hopeless romantics do. "Hopefully I can find that special someone and get married soon."'
-				'She smiles seeing the signs of love. "If he makes you happy then I am happy for you."'
-				'You''re not sure what more to say on the topic.'
+				'She smiles, seeing the signs of love. "If he makes you happy, then I''m happy for you."'
+				'You''re not sure what more to say on the topic and decide to change the subject.'
 				act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 				act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 			end
@@ -561,19 +561,19 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 		minut += 5
 		'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 		'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-		'You don''t even know if she is a virgin or not, you have never heard of her dating much. You''re not sure if you should even ask, but you are curious. "Do you have a boyfriend or girlfriend?"'
-		'She shakes her head. "Nope, but I would like to find the right guy. Until then I guess I just want to have a little fun."'
+		'You don''t even know if she''s a virgin or not and don''t know if you should even ask, but you''re curious. "Do you have a boyfriend or girlfriend?"'
+		'She shakes her head. "Nope, but I would like to find the right guy. Until then, I just want to have a little fun."'
 		act 'Ask if she has ever dated':
 			*clr & cla
 			minut += 5
 			gs 'npc_relationship', 'modify', 'A25', 'like'
 			'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-			'You nod in understanding. "So have you ever... you know dated a guy."'
-			'She blushes a bit realizing what you are really asking. "A few times but nothing to serious the beginning of this summer. While on vacation with my family, I meet this boy... it was magically. He was just perfect, we spent all our time together and one night... well we did it." She giggles a bit.'
+			'You nod in understanding. "So have you ever... You know. Dated a guy?"'
+			'She blushes when she realizes what you''re really asking. "A few times, but nothing too serious until a few months ago. While on vacation with my family, I met this boy... and it was magical. We spent all our time together and one night... Well, we did it..." she giggles.'
 			*nl
-			'You smile happy for her. "I am glad you found someone, shame he isn''t close. Are you still seeing him?"'
-			'She shakes her head no. "We talked about it, but felt it wouldn''t be fair. We still talk but are free to see other people." Then she talks about her first time a bit with him and how after that almost every day they had sex until she had to come home. After she finishes she asks you. "What about you?"'
+			'You smile. "I''m glad you found someone, but it''s a shame he isn''t close. Are you still seeing him?"'
+			'She shakes her head. "We talked about it, but felt it wouldn''t be fair. We still talk, but are free to see other people." She starts talking about her first time with him and how after that, they had sex almost every day until she had to come home. When she finishes her story, she turns to you. "What about you?"'
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 			if Rex_Love = 1 or artemQW['bf'] = 1 or kotovLoveQW = 1 or fedorKozlovQW or NikoVolkovQW >= 5 or (pcs_lover - pcs_girlfriends) > 0:
@@ -585,13 +585,13 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 			minut += 5
 			'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-			'You smile to her reassuringly. "I am sure you will find the right guy, or girl."'
-			'She giggles a bit. "I kinda already did."'
-			'You looked surprised. "Well tell me then, who is it?"'
-			'She blushes at your question. "While on vacation with my family, I meet this boy... it was magically. He was just perfect, we spent all our time together and one night... well we did it." She giggles a bit.'
+			'You smile at her reassuringly. "I''m sure you''ll find the right guy, or girl."'
+			'She giggles. "I kind of already did..."'
+			'You looked surprised. "Well? Who is it?"'
+			'She blushes. "While on vacation with my family, I met this boy... and it was magical. We spent all our time together and one night... Well, we did it..." she giggles.'
 			*nl
-			'You smile happy for her. "I am glad you found someone, shame he isn''t close. Are you still seeing him?"'
-			'She shakes her head no. "We talked about it, but felt it wouldn''t be fair. We still talk but are free to see other people." Then she talks about her first time a bit with him and how after that almost every day they had sex until she had to come home. After she finishes she asks you. "What about you?"'
+			'You smile. "I''m glad you found someone, but it''s a shame he isn''t close. Are you still seeing him?"'
+			'She shakes her head. "We talked about it, but felt it wouldn''t be fair. We still talk, but are free to see other people." She starts talking about her first time with him and how after that, they had sex almost every day until she had to come home. When she finishes her story, she turns to you. "What about you?"'
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 			if Rex_Love = 1 or artemQW['bf'] = 1 or kotovLoveQW = 1 or fedorKozlovQW or NikoVolkovQW >= 5 or (pcs_lover - pcs_girlfriends) > 0:
@@ -608,7 +608,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 			'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 			'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/home/bed_kiss.jpg"></center>'
 			if hotcat >= 5:
-				'As you sit side by side you look at her for a moment. Maybe for too long, or maybe she just senses it, but she turns her head to look at you. Her face is not that far from yours and you can''t help it. You just think she is so damn pretty. You lean over to give her a kiss, at first she stiffens from the kiss, but after a moment she returns the kiss she fully.'
+				'As you sit side by side, you can''t help but look at her. Maybe for too long, or maybe she just senses it, because she turns her head to look at you. Her face is not that far from yours and you can''t help yourself. You lean over to give her a kiss, a kiss she fully returns.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 1, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'stat'
 				act 'Stop kissing and talk more': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
@@ -616,7 +616,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 					*clr & cla
 					'<center><h4><font color="maroon">Sonia''s Room</font></h4></center>'
 					'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/pavlovsk/school/girl/sonia/home/bed_kiss.jpg"></center>'
-					'As you wrap your hands around the side of her face, you feel her hands hold you by your hips as the two of you keep kissing long and passionately. After a couple of minutes she pulls away obviously a bit flustered. She gets up and cracks the window open a bit. "It''s getting hot in here." She says but doesn''t elaborate, when she sits back down on the bed. She chooses a spot close to you but not so close as to invite another kiss.'
+					'As you wrap your hands around the side of her face, you feel her hands hold you by your hips as the two of you passionately make out. After a few minutes, she pulls away flustered. She gets up and cracks the window open. "It''s getting hot in here," she says, but doesn''t elaborate when she sits back down on the bed. She chooses a spot close to you, but not so close as to invite another kiss.'
 					gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 2, 'lesbian'
 					gs 'arousal', 'end'
 					gs 'stat'
@@ -624,7 +624,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sonia_chat1':
 					act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 				end
 			else
-				'As you sit side by side, you look at her for a moment. Maybe for too long, or maybe she just senses it, but she turns her head to look at you. Her face not that far from yours and you can''t help it. You just think she is so damn pretty, so you lean over and give her a kiss. She returns your kiss for a moment, then stops to pull away. Sensing that she isn''t interested, you decide to keep talking instead.'
+				'As you sit side by side, you can''t help but look at her. Maybe for too long, or maybe she just senses it, because she turns her head to look at you. Her face is not that far from yours and you can''t help yourself. You lean over to give her a kiss. She briefly returns your kiss before stopping to pull away. Sensing that she isn''t interested, you decide to keep talking instead.'
 				gs 'arousal', 'foreplay', 1, 'lesbian'
 				gs 'arousal', 'end'
 				gs 'stat'
@@ -639,13 +639,13 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'boyfriend_chat':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-	'"I have a boyfriend you know." you tell her.'
-	'She grins at you. "Right who are you dating again?"'
+	'"I have a boyfriend you know," you tell her.'
+	'She grins at you. "Right. Who are you dating again?"'
 	if NikoVolkovQW >= 5:
 		act 'Niko':
 			cla
-			'"Niko." you tell her.'
-			'She smiles to you. "Oh, he seems pretty nice and charming. You know for one of the gopniks." You talk to her a bit about how great of a guy he is.'
+			'"Niko," you tell her.'
+			'She smiles at you. "Oh. He seems pretty nice and charming. You know, for one of the gopniks." You talk to her about how great of a guy he is.'
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 		end
@@ -654,18 +654,18 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'boyfriend_chat':
 		act 'Fedor':
 			cla
 			if npc_grupTipe['A5'] = 5:
-				'"Fedor." you tell her.'
-				'She arches a slender brow obviously a bit surprised. "Fedor? Is he into girls? I mean after he sucked Vasily''s dick in front of the whole school, you kinda have to wonder."'
-				'You frown at her. "He didn''t have a choice, because those criminals where going to take everything from his family. He couldn''t pay them. He''s not gay!"'
-				'She holds up her hands. "Ok ok sorry, I was just wondering is all, as long as he makes you happy that''s all that matters." she says, obviously trying to make peace.'
-				'You nod, accepting her apology and instead start telling her about how great of a guy he is.'
+				'"Fedor," you tell her.'
+				'She arches a brow in surprise. "Fedor? Is he into girls? I mean, after he sucked Vasily''s dick in front of the whole school, you kind of have to wonder..."'
+				'You frown at her. "He didn''t have a choice! Those criminals were going to take everything from his family because he couldn''t pay them. He''s not gay!"'
+				'She holds up her hands. "Okay, okay. Sorry. As long as he makes you happy, that''s all that matters," she says, trying to make peace.'
+				'You nod, accepting her apology, and start telling her about how great of a guy he is.'
 				act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 				act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 			else
-				'"Fedor." you tell her.'
-				'She arches a slender brow slightly. "Fedor?" Then she grins. "If you were going to date a jock I would go for Lazar or maybe Ivan?" she says with a giggle.'
-				'You smile to her. "Well I like Fedor, he is sweet and makes me happy. You can have Lazar or Ivan."'
-				'You both giggle at that and then you tell her about how great Fedor is and what a amazing boyfriend he is.'
+				'"Fedor," you tell her.'
+				'She arches her brow slightly. "Fedor?" she asks before grinning. "If you were going to date a jock, I would have gone for Lazar. Or maybe Ivan?" she says with a giggle.'
+				'You smile at her. "I like Fedor. He''s sweet and makes me happy. You can have Lazar or Ivan."'
+				'You both giggle before you tell her about how great Fedor is and what an amazing boyfriend he is.'
 				act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 				act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 			end
@@ -675,17 +675,17 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'boyfriend_chat':
 		act 'Vitek':
 			cla
 			if soniaQW['vitek_bj_watched'] = 1:
-				'"Vitek." you tell her.'
-				'Sonia seems surprised for a moment. "Really? But neither of you said anything... when he and I... you know." You can tell she thinks it is weird neither of you mentioned the two of you was dating.'
-				'You shrug a little. "He messes around sometimes but I know he loves me, so I don''t mind." After that the conversation quickly stops, so you decided to change the subject.'
+				'"Vitek," you tell her.'
+				'She seems surprised. "Really? But neither of you said anything... When he and I... You know..."'
+				'You shrug. "He messes around sometimes, but I know he loves me, so I don''t mind." After that the conversation quickly stops, so you decide to change the subject.'
 			elseif soniafall >= 6:
-				'"Vitek." you tell her.'
-				'Sonia seems surprised for a moment. "Really? I... I''m sorry but he said he wasn''t seeing anyone and we fooled around a bit." You can tell she is afraid of how she will react, but you know it isn''t her fault.'
-				'You shake your head not sure what to say. "Let''s just change the subject."'
+				'"Vitek," you tell her.'
+				'She seems surprised. "Really? I... I''m sorry, but he said he wasn''t seeing anyone and we fooled around." You can tell she''s afraid of how you''ll react, but you know it isn''t her fault.'
+				'You shake your head, not sure what to say. "Let''s just change the subject."'
 			else
-				'"Vitek." you tell her.'
-				'Sonia seems surprised for a moment. "Really? I have been hanging out with Dan, Vasily and him a little lately and he never once mentioned it." You can tell she thinks it is weird he never mentioned he was dating you.'
-				'You shrug a little. "I trust him." After that the conversation quickly stops, so you decided to change the subject.'
+				'"Vitek," you tell her.'
+				'She seems surprised. "Really? I''ve been hanging out with Dan, Vasily and him a little lately and he never once mentioned it."'
+				'You shrug. "I trust him." After that, the conversation quickly stops and you decide to change the subject.'
 			end
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
@@ -695,15 +695,15 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'boyfriend_chat':
 		act 'Artem':
 			cla
 			if grupTipe = 3:
-				'"Artem." you tell her.'
-				'She grins. "Well, you guys make a cute couple." she says with a giggle.'
-				'You sigh as those in love sigh. "He''s sweet and really nice to me."'
-				'You both giggle at that and then you tell her about how great Artem is and what a amazing boyfriend he is.'
+				'"Artem," you tell her.'
+				'She grins. "Well, you guys make a cute couple," she says with a giggle.'
+				'You sigh in a way only those in love can. "He''s sweet and really nice to me."'
+				'You both giggle before you tell her about how great Artem is and what an amazing boyfriend he is.'
 			else
-				'"Artem." you tell her.'
-				'She looks a little surprised. "Artem? The nerd?" She seems to consider it for a moment. "Well, I guess he is kind of cute... just a little surprised is all." she says with a giggle.'
+				'"Artem," you tell her.'
+				'She looks a little surprised. "Artem? The nerd?" She seems to consider it for a moment. "Well, I guess he is kind of cute... Just a little surprised is all," she says with a giggle.'
 				'You shake your head slightly at her comment. "He''s sweet and really nice to me."'
-				'You both giggle at that and then you tell her about how great Fedor is and what a amazing boyfriend he is.'
+				'You both giggle before you tell her about how great Artem is and what an amazing boyfriend he is.'
 			end
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
@@ -712,12 +712,12 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'boyfriend_chat':
 	if Rex_Love = 1:
 		act 'Rex':
 			cla
-			'"Rex." you tell her.'
-			'"Who?" she asks as she cocks her head slightly, obviously trying to think if she has ever heard his name before. It seems that she thinks of him. "Wait, isn''t he the guy that throws parties all the time? My brother sometimes goes to his parties."'
+			'"Rex," you tell her.'
+			'"Who?" she asks as she cocks her head slightly. "Wait, isn''t he the guy that throws parties all the time? My brother sometimes goes to them."'
 			'You nod. "Yeah, that''s him."'
 			*nl
-			'She now has an inquisitive look on her face. "How did you meet him? He''s a few years older than you." she asks, obviously curious how you two crossed paths long enough to start dating.'
-			'You smile at her. "I was invited to his party." you tell her, then add "Ok, he is friends with my sister. She invited me to his party and that''s where we met." You talk about the night you met him and your first date.'
+			'She now has an inquisitive look on her face. "How did you meet him? He''s a few years older than you," she asks.'
+			'You smile at her. "I was invited to his party," you tell her, then add "Okay, he''s friends with my sister. She invited me to his party and that''s where we met." You talk about the night you met him and your first date.'
 			act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 			act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 		end
@@ -733,13 +733,13 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'tell_about_generic_boyfreind':
 	*clr & cla
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/pavlovsk/resident/soniaHome/sonia_bedroom/sonia_bed.jpg"></center>'
-	'"I have a boyfriend you know." you tell her.'
-	'She grins at you. "Right who are you dating again?"'
-	'"<<$ARGS[1]>>." you tell her.'
+	'"I have a boyfriend you know," you tell her.'
+	'She grins at you. "Right. Who are you dating again?"'
+	'"<<$ARGS[1]>>," you tell her.'
 	*nl
-	'"Who?" She asks as she cocks her head slightly, obviously trying to think if she has ever heard his name before.'
-	'You shake your head slightly. "You''ve never met him. I just met him."'
-	'She smiles a bit. "Just some guy you met huh?" You laugh then tell her about him.'
+	'"Who?" she asks as she cocks her head slightly.'
+	'You shake your head slightly. "You''ve never met him. I only just met him."'
+	'She smiles. "Just some guy you met, huh?" You laugh before you start telling her about him.'
 	act 'Stop talking': gt 'soniahome','sonia_room'
 	act 'Keep talking': gt 'soniahome', 'sonia_chat1'
 end