Text edits from krh

locations/kinoM

@@ -2,8 +2,8 @@
 
 if $ARGS[0] = 'start':
 	minut += 30
-	'You go to the cinema with <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> who buys two tickets for the back row.'
-	'While you wait for the show <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> tells you an anecdote as he buys popcorn and the drinks for the show.<br>'
+	'You go to the cinema with <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>>, who buys two tickets for the back row.'
+	'While you wait for the movie to start, <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> tells you an anecdote as he buys popcorn and drinks.<br>'
 	gs 'anekdot'
 *nl
 	if loverdays[lover_number] > 15 and haraklover[lover_number] = 2:gs 'boylove', 'tits'
@@ -35,21 +35,21 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 	minut += 90
 	fat += 2
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/locations/city/citycenter/mall/cinema/kino.jpg"></center>'
-	'You and <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> quickly find your seats and <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> puts the big container of popcorn on your lap.'
+	'You and <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> quickly find your seats and <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> puts the big cup of popcorn on your lap.'
 
 	if haraklover[lover_number] < 2:
 
 		act 'Hug his arm':
 			cla
 			loverrelation[lover_number] += 1
-			'You lean against him and hold his arm, taking his hand in yours. He leans over and kisses you and then the two of you sit there while holding hands for the entire movie.'
+			'You lean against him and hold his arm, taking his hand in yours. He leans over and kisses you in response. The two of you sit there holding hands for the entire movie.'
 			xgt 'kinoM', 'b'
 		end
 	elseif haraklover[lover_number] = 2:
 		act 'Hug his arm':
 			cla
 			loverrelation[lover_number] += 1
-			'You lean against him and hug his arm, taking his hand in yours. He leans over and kisses you. Once the lights go down and the theatre gets dark, his hand breaks free from yours and rubs your knee. A few minutes later his hand works it''s way down your thigh, sliding between them to your crotch. There he begins to rub your pussy with his fingers while he leans over and whispers to you. "Baby, I want you, right here, right now."'
+			'You lean against him and hug his arm, taking his hand in yours. He leans over and kisses you. Once the lights go out and the theatre gets dark, his hand breaks free from yours and begins to rub your knee. A few minutes later the hand works its way up your thighs, sliding between them to your crotch. He rubs your pussy with his fingers and leans over to whisper: "Baby, I want you right here, right now."'
 
 			act 'Shush him and remove his hand, so you can watch the movie':xgt 'kinoM', 'b'
 			act 'Jerk him off':gt 'kinoM', 'hj'
@@ -58,11 +58,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'a':
 		end
 	end
 
-	act 'Watch a movie':
+	act 'Watch the movie':
 		cla
 		loverrelation[lover_number] -= 1
 		intel_exp += 1 + (mentats_dose - rand(0,mentats_dose))
-		'The movie proved interesting and you sit through the entire movie without interruption.'
+		'The movie proves interesting and you sit through the whole thing without interruption.'
 		xgt 'kinoM', 'b'
 	end
 end
@@ -74,7 +74,7 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 	loverrelation[lover_number] += 2
 	gs 'brosok'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/boyfriend/sex/event/cinema/sinema.jpg"></center>'
-	'You reach over and undo his pants, opening his fly and pulling his front of his boxers down just  far enough for his dick to spring free, apparently he was already rock hard. Looking around to make sure no one is watching , <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> takes out a condom and put it on his penis.  While he''s doing that you adjust your clothes enough that you can pull your panties down to allow access to your pussy. With a final look around you lift up slightly and slide across his lap reaching one hand between your legs to take his dick in your hand, guiding it towards your moist cunt. You bite your lip as his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock slides into your pussy, to keep from moaning out loud. Then you began to slowly rock up and down fucking him in the dark theatre behind the rest of the audience.'
+	'You reach over and undo his pants, opening his fly and pulling the front of his boxers just far enough down for his dick to spring free - he was already rock hard. Looking around to make sure no one is watching, <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> takes out a condom and puts it on his penis; while he does that, you adjust your clothes so that you can pull your panties down to allow access to your pussy. With a final look around you lift up slightly and slide across his lap, reaching between your legs to take his dick in your hand and guide it inside your moist cunt. You bite your lip as his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock enters your pussy, to keep from moaning out loud. Then you begin to slowly move, sneakily fucking your lover in the dark theatre behind the rest of the audience.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'vaginal', 10, 'sub'
 	gs 'cum_call', '', $lover[lover_number], 1
@@ -85,11 +85,11 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'sex':
 		pcs_willpwr += 15
 		
 		$orgasm_or = 'custom'
-		$orgasm_txt = 'You feel growing wave of pleasure inside of you, you start moaning louder and louder causing <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> to puts his hand over you mouth stifling your noises. Then a massive orgasm hits you, leaving you shuddering and quivering on his cock.'
+		$orgasm_txt = 'As you feel pleasure growing inside of you, you start moaning involuntarily, louder and louder. <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> puts his hand over your mouth in an effort to muffle the noises. Then a massive orgasm hits you, leaving you shuddering and quivering on his cock.'
 	end
 
-	'Finally <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> cannot take it any longer and shots his load into the condom. Once he''s finished you move back to your seat and straighten  out your clothes. Once you''re both full dressed again, you look at each other and stifle a laugh as your act went unnoticed and you watch the rest of the movie holding hands.'
-										
+	'<<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> cannot take it any longer and shoots his load into the condom. Once he is finished, you move back to your seat and straighten out your clothes. Once you both are fully dressed again, you look at each other and stifle a laugh. Your act went unnoticed and you watch the rest of the movie holding hands.'
+
 	act 'Next':gt 'kinoM', 'b'
 end
 
@@ -102,8 +102,8 @@ gs 'cum_manage'
 	loverrelation[lover_number] += 2
 	gs 'brosok'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/boyfriend/sex/event/cinema/sinema1.jpg"></center>'
-	'You reach over and undo his pants, opening the fly and pulling his front of his underwear down just enough. His dick springs free, apparently he was already rock hard. You look around to make sure no one was watching, then you lean over and put your face in his lap, you wrap your lips around the shaft of his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock and began to slowly suck his dick in the dark theater.'
-	'Soon <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> couldn''t take it anymore and he shoots his load into your mouth, spurts of hot sperm filling your mouth up. You keep your lips wrapped tightly around his dick until he is finished spurting his load. Having no choice you swallow it all down and suck his dick clean. Once done you sit back up and you look at each other and stifle a laugh as no one seems to have noticed and you watch the rest of the movie holding hands.'
+	'You reach over and undo his pants, opening the fly and pulling the front of his underwear down just enough. His dick springs free, already rock hard. You look around to make sure no one is watching, then lean over and put your face in his lap. You wrap your lips around the shaft of his <<dick>>cm <<$dick_girth>> cock and begin to slowly suck him off in the dark theater.'
+	'Soon <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> can no longer hold back and shoots his load into your mouth, flooding it with spurts of hot sperm. You keep your lips wrapped tightly around his dick until he is finished unloading. Lacking any better options, you swallow it all down and suck his dick clean. Once done you sit back up. The two of you look at each other and stifle a laugh, as no one seems to have noticed what you just did. You watch the rest of the movie holding hands quietly.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'bj', 10, 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -117,8 +117,8 @@ if $ARGS[0] = 'hj':
 	loverrelation[lover_number] += 1
 	gs 'brosok'
 	'<center><img <<$set_imgh>> src="images/characters/city/boyfriend/sex/event/cinema/sinema2.jpg"></center>'
-	'You reach over and undo his pants, opening the fly and pulling his front of his underwear down just enough. His dick springs free, apparently he was already rock hard. You look around to make sure no one was watching while, <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> took out a condom and put it on his penis. You began to stroke his dick with your hand, while you watch the movie.'
-	'Soon, your skillful movements caused him to to shoot his load in the condom. Once done you lean back watch the rest of the movie holding hands.'
+	'You reach over and undo his pants, opening the fly and pulling the front of his underwear down just enough. His dick springs free, already rock hard. You look around to make sure no one is watching, while <<$loverdesc[lover_number]>> takes out a condom and puts it on his penis. You begin to stroke his cock while watching the movie.'
+	'Soon your skillful movements make him shoot his load in the condom. Once done, you lean back and watch the rest of the movie holding hands.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'hj', 10, 'sub'
 	gs 'stat'
@@ -129,7 +129,7 @@ end
 if $ARGS[0] = 'b':
 	minut += 30
 	fat += 1
-	'The movie ends and the lights came on in the theater. Soon all the people head for the exits.'
+	'The movie ends and the lights switch on in the theater. Soon the audience heads for the exits.'
 
 	gs 'arousal', 'end'
 	gs 'stat'