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locations/NatBelGo

@@ -2,7 +2,7 @@
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[16]>> <<$npcSurName[16]>></font></b></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-'You came to Natasha and she asked you, Will you go to her house, teach lessons.'
+'You go up to Natasha and she asks you, "Will you come to my house to do our homework?"'
 
 act 'Go with Natasha':
 	cls
@@ -10,9 +10,9 @@ act 'Go with Natasha':
 	gs 'stat'
 	'<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[14]>> <<$npcSurName[16]>></font></b></center>'
 	'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-	'Do_You 15 minutes walking down the street to Natasha''s house discussing all the small stuff.'
+	'It takes you 15 minutes to walk to Natasha''s home. You discuss all the small stuff in your lives that amuse you.'
 
-	act 'Log in to the apartment':gt 'NatBelHome'
+	act 'Go into the apartment':gt 'NatBelHome'
 end
 
 --- NatBelGo ---------------------------------

locations/NatBelHome

@@ -5,12 +5,12 @@ if BeInNatBelHome = 0:BeInNatBelHome = 1
 gs 'stat'
 '<center><b><font color="maroon"><<$npcName[16]>> <<$npcSurName[16]>></font></b></center>'
 '<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-'Very poor room, but as the whole apartment.'
+'The room shows the the occupant is very poor as does the whole apartment.'
 
 if lernHome ! 0:
-	'Natasha arranges books on the table.'
+	'Natasha arranges her books on the table.'
 
-	act 'Engage with Natasha':
+	act 'Study with Natasha':
 		cls
 		minut += 60
 		!grupNPC[16] += 10
@@ -19,9 +19,9 @@ if lernHome ! 0:
 		intel += rand(1, 2)
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-		'You are within an hour engaged with Natasha and lessons learned.'
+		'You spend an hour studying with Natasha and get your homework done.'
 
-		act 'rest':gt $curloc
+		act 'Next':gt $curloc
 	end
 elseif lernHome = 0:
 	'Natasha is sitting on her bed.'
@@ -32,30 +32,30 @@ elseif lernHome = 0:
 		NatBelBestFrend += 1
 		gs 'stat'
 		'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-		'You talked to Natasha about any nonsense.'
+		'You talk with Natasha about things that interest you both.'
 
-		if NatBelBestFrend = 1:'Natasha recognized, she lives in a very poor family. She has no father, and her mother works for a penny at a garment factory.'
-		if NatBelBestFrend >= 2:'Natasha envies, that other girls can smartly odevatsya and buy cosmetics, when she wears her mother''s things.'
+		if NatBelBestFrend = 1:'Natasha knows that she lives in a very poor family. She has no father and her mother works for a pittance at the garment factory.'
+		if NatBelBestFrend >= 2:'Natasha is envious that other girls can dress smartly and buy cosmetics while she has to wear her mother''s things.'
 
 		act 'further':gt $curloc
 	end
 
 	if NatDolg <= 0 and money >= 2000 and natsub > 0:
-		'Natasha asked confused "<<$name>>, and you can take a couple of thousand?"'
+		'Hesitantly, Natasha asks you, "<<$name>>, can you lend me a couple of thousand rubles? I''ll pay you back, I promise."'
 
-		act 'Give money Natasha':
+		act 'Give Natasha the money':
 			cls
 			minut += 15
 			NatDolg = 2000
 			money -= 2000
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-			'You got the purse and gave Natasha money knowing that the money she just will not give up and that you would prefer to play with it.'
+			'You get your purse and give Natasha the money knowing that she will not be able to repay it and that you would prefer to play with her.'
 
-			act 'further':gt $curloc
+			act 'Next':gt $curloc
 		end
 	elseif NatBelBestFrend >= 3 and NatDolg = 0 and money >= 5000 and natsub = 0:
-		'Natasha looked down "<<$name>>, you are found money. Could you lend me 5000 rubles. I will give, parole."'
+		'Natasha looks down in embarrassment, "<<$name>>, you have lots of money. Could you lend me 5000 rubles? I will pay it back, I give you my word."'
 
 		act 'Lend Natasha':
 			cls
@@ -66,16 +66,16 @@ elseif lernHome = 0:
 			NatBelBestFrend += 1
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-			'You got the purse and gave Natasha borrow money. Natasha was delighted and said, that will give them a month.'
+			'You get your purse and lend Natasha the money. Natasha is delighted and says that she will pay it back in a month.'
 
 			act 'rest':gt $curloc
 		end
 	elseif NatDolg>0 and NatDolgDay > daystart:
-		'Natasha promises you to repay the debt <<NatDolg>> rubles, through <<NatDolgDay-daystart>> days'
+		'Natasha promises you to repay the <<NatDolg>> rubles in <<NatDolgDay-daystart>> days.'
 	elseif NatDolg > 0 and NatDolgDay <= daystart:
-		'Natasha looks at the floor "<<$name>>, I have no money, that would give back to."'
+		'Natasha looks at the floor, "<<$name>>, I have no money to pay you."'
 
-		act 'Forgive the debt Natasha':
+		act 'Forgive Natasha''s debt':
 			cls
 			minut += 15
 			NatDolg = 0
@@ -83,76 +83,83 @@ elseif lernHome = 0:
 			NatBelBestFrend += 10
 			gs 'stat'
 			'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-			'You have decided to forgive the debt Natasha, She was delighted and began cardiopulmonary thank you.'
+			'You decide to forgive the Natasha''s debt. She is delighted and begins heartfuly thanking you.'
 
 			act 'rest':gt $curloc
 		end
 
 		if dom >= 10 and natotrab = 0:
-			act 'claim money':
+			act 'Demand repayment':
 				cls
 				minut += 15
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/npc/16.jpg"></center>'
-				'You have decided not to lower the debt Natasha, and rolled her scandal, demanding the return of money. Natasha shrank together into a ball on his bed "Svetochka, sweet, forgive me. I am for you." Looking at you frightened Natasha came up with a couple of ideas, how you can use this chicken. And you evil hissed her "You''re my every last penny exhaust creature."'
+				'You decide not to reduce Natasha''s debt. You angrily confront her, demanding the return of the money. Natasha curls up into a ball on her bed "<<$nickname>>, dear, please forgive me. I will do anything you say." Natasha looks at you with fearful eyes and comes up with a couple of ideas on how you can use this chicken. You snarl at her with an evil hiss, "You''re my creature until you''ve worked off every last kopeck."'
 
-				act 'on your knees! And open your mouth!':
+				act 'On your knees! And open your mouth!':
 					cls
 					minut += 5
 					natotrab += 1
 					natsub += 1
+					dom += 1
 					!!natknee
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/natknee.jpg"></center>'
-					'You barked at Natasha, and she immediately obediently knelt down and opened her mouth.'
+					'You bark at Natasha to get on her knees. She immediately kneels down at your feet and obediently opens her mouth.'
 
 					act 'Spit in her face':
 						cls
 						minut += 5
 						natsub += 1
+						dom += 1
 						NatDolg -= 500
 						!!natknee
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/natknee.jpg"></center>'
-						'You barked at Natasha, and she immediately obediently knelt down and opened her mouth. You have collected saliva and relish Natasha spat in the face, from what she jerked and squeezed her eyes shut. you smiled, "Fair_Enough, forgive." Natasha opened her eyes which did not get asked again and harchok "forgive?" you laughed "forgive 500 rubles of debt, fool. Now you will work until the entire debt is not extinguished."'
+						'You collect the saliva in your mouth and, with relish spit in Natasha''s face. She jerks and squeezes her eyes shut but makes no move to wipe the spittle away.' 
+						'You smile, "Fair enough, you are forgiven."'
+						'Natasha opens her eyes and asks in disbelief, "It''s forgiven?"' 
+						'You laugh, "500 rubles of debt is forgiven, fool. You will do everything I tell you until the entire debt is gone."'
 
-						act 'rest':gt $curloc
+						act 'Next':gt $curloc
 					end
 				end
 			end
-		end
-
-		if natotrab > 0 and NatDolg > 0:
-			'Natasha has yet <<NatDolg>> rubles.'
+		
+		elseif natotrab > 0 and NatDolg > 0:
+			'Natasha still doesn''t  have the <<NatDolg>> rubles.'
 
-			act 'on your knees! And open your mouth!':
+			act 'On your knees! And open your mouth!':
 				cls
 				minut += 5
 				natotrab += 1
 				natsub += 1
+				dom += 1
 				!!natknee
 				gs 'stat'
 				'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/natknee.jpg"></center>'
-				'You barked at Natasha, and she immediately obediently knelt down and opened her mouth.'
+				'You bark at Natasha to get on her knees. She immediately kneels down at your feet and obediently opens her mouth.'
 
 				act 'Spit in her face':
 					cls
 					minut += 5
 					natsub += 1
+					dom += 1
 					NatDolg -= 500
 					!!natknee
 					gs 'stat'
 					'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/natspit.jpg"></center>'
-					'You barked at Natasha, and she immediately obediently knelt down and opened her mouth. You have collected saliva and relish Natasha spat in the face, from what she jerked and squeezed her eyes shut.'
+					'You collect the saliva in your mouth and, with relish spit in Natasha''s face. She jerks and squeezes her eyes shut but makes no move to wipe the spittle away.'
 
-					act 'rest':gt $curloc
+					act 'Next':gt $curloc
 				end
-
+			end
 				if natsub >= 4:
 					act 'Make her lick':
 						cls
 						minut += 5
 						natsub += 1
+						dom += 1
 						NatDolg -= 500
 
 						if npcSex[16] = 0:npcSex[16] = 1 & girl += 1
@@ -164,52 +171,83 @@ elseif lernHome = 0:
 						!!natknee
 						gs 'stat'
 						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/natlick.jpg"></center>'
-						'You were forced to undress and Natasha undressing alone stood in front of her face. "Now lick!". Natasha frightened started to work.'
+						'You force Natasha to undress you and then watch as she undresses herself before she returns to kneeling at your feet. You pull her face into your pussy and snarl at her, "Now lick!". Natasha fearfully starts to work.'
 
 						if natsub < 10:
-							'This Krivorukov goat even the clitoris is unable to get and only sluggishly, without enthusiasm chomps his mouth on your pussy.'
+							'This useless cunt can''t even find your clitoris and only sluggishly works her mouth on your pussy without any enthusiasm.'
 
 							if dom >= 20 and NatDolg >= 500:
 								act 'Piss in her mouth':
 									cls
 									minut += 5
 									natsub += 1
+									dom += 1
 									NatDolg -= 500
 									natpee += 1
 									!!natknee
 									gs 'stat'
 									'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/natpee.jpg"></center>'
-									'You are angry at this bitch released urine stream in the face of Natasha. She closed her eyes and bowed face down, but not recoiled and silently doterpela flogging until the very end.'
-
-									act 'rest':gt $curloc
+									'You are angry at this bitch so you release your urine in Natasha''s face. She closes her eyes and bows her head down but does not recoil and silently accepts your golden shower until the very end.'
+							else 
+								act 'Make her stop'
+									cls
+									minut += 5
+									horny -= 10
+									money -= 50
+									
+									gs 'stat'
+									$ImageNeededPlaceholder
+									'<center><img src="images\etogame\icecreem.jpg"></center>'
+									'You get tired of her lackluster attempts to get you off, in fact, she is doing such a bad job that it is actually turning you off.'
+									'"You are hopeless. Here, go buy an icecream and practice licking. You''d better do better next time, bitch." You throw a 50 ruble note at her as she stops licking you.'
+									
+									act 'Next':gt $curloc
 								end
 							end
 						else
 							orgasm += 1
 							horny = 0
 							gs 'stat'
-							'Natasha carefully handles your pussy tongue and you chustvuete as you orgasm rolls.'
+							'Natasha enthusiastically goes to work on your pussy, using her mouth and tongue. She fucks you with her tongue then switches to sucking on your now engorged clitoris. You grab her head and roughly grind your pussy on her face as your orgasm rolls over your body.'
 						end
 
-						act 'rest':gt $curloc
+						act 'Next':gt $curloc
 					end
 				end
-			end
-
-			if natsub >= 6:
-				act 'call brother':
-					cls
-					minut += 15
-					natsub += 1
-					NatDolg -= 500
-					natbj += 1
-					gs 'stat'
-					'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/natbj.jpg"></center>'
-					'You called my brother and he quickly came to the apartment Natashkiny. Briefly explain the situation to his brother "And you, bitch, so now the cheek and took smacked, i_get_it?" Natasha jitters nodded and knelt waiting when Kolka starts fucking her in the mouth. Kolka went to Natashkiny face and took his standing member. He patted the little purple head lips Natasha and she began to lick him his tongue.'
-
-					act 'rest':gt $curloc
+			
+				if hour >= 18 and hour <21 and natsub >= 6 and natbro = 0:
+					act 'Call your brother':
+						cls
+						minut += 15
+						natsub += 1
+						dom += 1
+						NatDolg -= 500
+						natbj += 1
+						natbro += 1
+						gs 'stat'
+						'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/natbj.jpg"></center>'
+					
+						'You call your brother and he quickly comes up to Natasha''s apartment. You briefly explain the situation to your brother. 
+						"And you, bitch, you''re going to use that mouth of yours to make Kolka feel good, you got it?" you hiss at Natasha, grabbing her jaw and staring in the eyes.'
+						'Natasha jerkily nods and kneels at Kolka''s feet. She reaches up with trembling hands to unfasten Kolka''s pants and pulls out his semi-hard dick. She tentatively begins to lick it and after a moment takes the now fully hard shaft into her mouth. Kolka starts fucking her in the mouth.'
+
+						act 'Continue':
+							cls
+							minut += 5
+						
+							gs 'stat'
+							'<center><img src="images/qwest/alter/ev2/bscum.jpg"></center>'
+						
+							'Kolka holds Natasha by the hair as he pistons his cock into he mouth rapidly. Natasha''s chin is covered with her drool and it is soaking the front of her shirt. With a grunt, Kolka pulls his dick from Natasha''s mouth and she automatically opens her mouth and sticks out her tongue. Kolka pumps his dick a few times then shoots his cum into Natasha''s waiting mouth.'
+							'"Swallow it, slut." You command when Kolka is done before Natasha can spit out the sperm.'
+							'Natasha grimaches but complies, swallowing Kolka''s load then opening her mouth to show that it is gone.'
+					
+							act 'Next':gt $curloc
+							end
+						end
+					end	
 				end
-			end
+			end	
 		end
 	end
 end

locations/NatBelVhod

@@ -2,26 +2,26 @@
 CLOSE ALL
 
 cla
-*clr
+clr
 
 if BeInNatBelHome = 0:BeInNatBelHome = 1
 gs'stat'
 
 GoInside = 1
 $byetext=''
-if hour <18 and kanikuli = 0 and week <6: $byetext='You call at the door, but nobody opens.' & GoInside = 0
+if hour <18 and kanikuli = 0 and week <6: $byetext='You knock on the door, but nobody answers.' & GoInside = 0
 
-if hour > 20 : $byetext='Too late, to go to visit' & GoInside = 0
+if hour > 20 : $byetext='It is to late to go to visit.' & GoInside = 0
 
-if hour < 8 : $byetext='Too early, to go to visit' & GoInside = 0
+if hour < 8 : $byetext='It is to early to go to visit.' & GoInside = 0
 
 if GoInside ! 0:
-	'You call at the door. You Natasha opens and invites enter.'
-	act 'Log in to the apartment':gt'NatBelHome'
+	'You knock on the door. Natasha answers and invites you in.'
+	act 'Go into the apartment':gt'NatBelHome'
 else
 	'<<$byetext>>'
 end
-act 'Escape':gt'pod_ezd','etaj_4'
+act 'Leave':gt'pod_ezd','etaj_4'
 
 --- NatBelVhod ---------------------------------